Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Timar Daragon

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:48, 25 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: WP:TOTJ.

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) This really has been on the page unfairly for far too long. Grae's objection seems to be fixed. There is still alot of resemblance, but there is no longer a cut-and-paste feel to the article. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:54, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 09:28, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Paraphrase more. This cannot read exactly like Hok Daragon. Graestan ( Talk ) 16:20, 26 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I don't exactly see how this is a problem; all the info on her is included, and the only thing that really distinguishes them is that one is male and one is female. They're together for the entirety of the comic.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 15:17, September 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fine, fine, I'll paraphrase.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 22:57, September 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Wording has been varied. I hope this will satisfy your objection.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 21:13, September 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) This is still too similar to Hok. Yes, a few things here and there have been changed, but there are still several places that could easily be paraphrased, where you could easily substitute a few synonyms to make it so that there aren't so many sentences that read exactly or almost exactly the same. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:51, November 5, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Remove nomination (AgriCorps vote only)
 * 1) Cut-and-paste of Hok Daragon. Nominator expresses no desire to paraphrase.  Graestan ( Talk ) 18:47, September 9, 2009 (UTC)

Gorrm

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:32, September 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Giant monkey man with an earring!

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:48, October 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 09:33, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farl-suggestion:
 * 2) * As you are nominating several articles that link to Merchants' Guild, could you consider creating an article/stub for Merchant's Guild? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:49, September 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Created.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:23, September 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) For starters, there is information which is cited as being from FotSE which is not from that source. Graestan ( Talk ) 00:42, September 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:23, September 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) The article is good but it is not sourced properly. He did not appear in Funeral for a Dark Lord therefore he cannot be listed as appearing in "The Golden Age of the Sith" if he did not appear in all the issues. The referencing should also be adjusted like this also.  Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:49, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *Addressed.
 * 8) *One last thing, what is the relevance of the last sentence of the Bts? Do you mean to say that Gorrm got an entry himself or that he was mentioned in Kahorr's entry? Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 23:54, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) "Kahorr had Gorrm give the police the pertinent documents; by a Merchants' Guild decision, the Starbreaker 12 had indeed been granted to Kahorr." This isn't very clear. Did they give the police the documents, and then have the Starbreaker granted to Kahorr? Or were they showing the police the documents to prove that the Starbreaker had already been granted to Kahorr? Also, please watch your linking; there were several links missing. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:57, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) happened upon the Sith Empire, which had been lost since the Hundred-Year Darkness Find a better word than lost. Empires don't become lost. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:56, November 6, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Horak-mul

 * Nominated by: "For England, James?" "No. For me."
 * Nomination comments:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:30, September 29, 2009 (UTC)

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Ha-ha! Cool GoldenEye reference. Fits Horak-mul--Jedi Kasra (talk) 22:52, September 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Glad you noticed. ;)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:29, October 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Didn't get it. Something to do with that guy.... James Bond... was it? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:07, September 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *Strike that last comment. It was on TV yesterday. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:52, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 02:41, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --Eyrezer 20:38, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 23:56, November 1, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Attack of the Clone
 * 2) * Please watch your linking, particularly to events. I rather doubt that all of the related battles are linked. Also, if you're indeed trying to say that (what is now) the third paragraph details the Battle of Khar Delba, then it's absolutely pointless waiting to make the reference at the very end as you do now.
 * 3) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:42, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *His cybernetic eye is nowhere except in the infobox. Mentioning it at the end of the bio does not alleviate this issue if it's not clarified what it was.  CC7567  (talk) 01:52, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **That poses a dilemma; in the Tales of the Jedi comics no significance is placed on the eye, it isn't shown to have any powers or benefits, or that he even lost his eye in the first place. What would you like me to do?
 * 6) ***I guess it's fine the way it is, then.  CC7567  (talk) 02:41, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 8) *Place of death needs to be noted in infobox.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) *Context on Valley of the Dark Lords.
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) *His artificial eye should be mentioned in the P&T section.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) *That's all. Good work. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:39, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Same issue as my objection for Gorrm. He didn't appear in Conquest and Unification so he can't be listed as appearing in the whole story arc. Or am I incorrect and this is actually something that is always done with TOTJ?  Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:56, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Addressed.

Comments
 * Can you add another pic to the body? --Eyrezer 20:38, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Dor Gal-ram

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:50, September 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A double nom with Horak-mul.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:45, October 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 20:42, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 23:58, November 1, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Same issue as my objection for Gorrm. He didn't appear in Conquest and Unification so he can't be listed as appearing in the whole story arc.  Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:55, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed.
 * 3) The Grand Master
 * 4) *There seems to be a bit of superfluous information in the bio, that really just doesn't add anything to the article for Gal-Ram. (i.e. the extra info about the arrival of the Daragons and subsequent events could be condensed quite a bit to just the necessities)
 * 5) *Also, the bio could be broken up into more than just the current two long paragraphs.
 * 6) *Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:14, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Unidentified IG-86 sentinel droid 1

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 09:33, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: If the article survives as lenght as its now, I may try to feature him as well.

(0 ACs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) *I'm going to give this another review soon, for now here are some issues:
 * 3) * Intro-"Things were complicated..." "Things" is too-colloquial. Please rephrase.
 * 4) **Better now?--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * "When he was destroyed by Skywalker, Shahan Alama immediately noted that his body was lacking for lightsaber cuts." How is this relevant to mention in the "Characteristics" section?
 * 6) **Uh, it isn't. What was I thinking?--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *More to come.  JangFett  (Talk) 11:16, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **I'll be waiting : )--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) The Grand Master continues his comeback...
 * 10) * Intro: You say they are going to free Ziro from a prison, and then all of a sudden they head to the Republic Executive Building. Why are they going there?
 * 11) **Noted.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * I see many grammar issues in the intro and body. Please try to fix these yourself.
 * 13) **I will try.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * How was the Power control room a "key" part of Bane's plan? (Don't forget, this article is from the prospective of one of the members of Bane's posse, so things like this shouldn't be left a mystery.)
 * 15) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) ***Okay, but you still don't say why it was a key part. (i.e., they used it activate the lockdown) If you feel tis is not relevant enough to the article's subject to be put in, then don't bother saying it was central to the plan.
 * 17) ****Removed the key part section.--Kreivi Wolter 13:49, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * "tried to escape in fear" Can you be sure that it was in fear, and not just that particular droid's programming? This is speculative, and should be removed.
 * 19) **I think it's rather obvious that the droid fears. But alas, ur right. It's not confirmed in any way.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) * Why were the Senators conferring in the East Wing?
 * 21) **I explained it, but I wonder is it relevant to this droid?--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) ***That was a little too much; you just needed a little info about why they might be gathering there.
 * 23) * Please review the LG. I don't believe an "aftermath" section is appropriate in this case. That makes it sound like the article was centered around a battle or event, rathen than a character.
 * 24) **Hmmm. Can I just say "After destruction", as I can't say "Legacy" or "After death"?--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) ***Or you could not bother giving its own section, or you could make a "destruction" (or similar name) section, describing his fight with Skywalker and the aftermath.
 * 26) ****Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 11:16, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) * You say Skywalker attacked the droid while it was heading downstairs, after getting it and Alama to leave the room, but then you say "after defeating the droid, Skywalker left the room". Which is true? Did he fight the droid in the room, or outside of it? (IIRC, it was outside)
 * 28) **That was really fuzzy indeed.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) * I think you should move the part about Skywalker comparing the likeness of this droid to HELIOS-3D to the characteristics section only, because it is completely irrelevant to anything except what the droid looked like.
 * 30) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) * You refer to this droid as a "he" throughout the article, but is there anything that specifically says it has male programming?
 * 32) **Oh darn... didn't thing that.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:35, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) Attack of the Clone
 * 35) *Cut down the intro. Three paragraphs is surpassing the acceptable length for an article of this size.
 * 36) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 11:16, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) *The "mission to the Thicket" is a conjecturally titled article and should not be referred to that way. It isn't even necessary to the intro.
 * 38) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 11:16, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) *You are missing an extremely large amount of noun articles, i.e. "a" and "the".
 * 40) **I'll get on that.--Kreivi Wolter 11:16, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 41) *Never used "unidentified" in any IU article.
 * 42) **You mean only the first phrase?--Kreivi Wolter 11:16, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) ***I'm referring to whatever is in the article.  CC7567  (talk) 11:37, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) ****Didn't find any more than that on the first phrase. I removed it.--Kreivi Wolter 14:56, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) *More to come once the others have finished.  CC7567  (talk) 20:48, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 46) The Grand Master is back for more...
 * 47) * Still seeing a lot of grammar errors.
 * 48) * Why was the plan complicated when Skywalker was spotted? Was it not a complicated plan before? I think that for what you are trying to say, something along the lines of "threatened" would work better.
 * 49) **Good call.--Kreivi Wolter 16:42, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 50) * Is the fact that the droid's fight with Skywalker was later mentioned really relevant enough to put in the intro, or even in the article at all?
 * 51) **Well, maybe not in the intro, but I wouldn't remove it from the LG.--Kreivi Wolter 16:42, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 52) ***I don't understand how such an offhand mention is relevant to the article in any way at all.
 * 53) ****I thought about that, and in the end, ur right. I removed it.--Kreivi Wolter 15:32, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 54) *Remember: call people only by their last names after their first mention in the body.
 * 55) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 16:42, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 56) * How do you know that the droid "wasn't afraid of confronting" Skywalker?
 * 57) **Does he look like he is afraid? : ) I took the example from the article Shahan Alama, which is a good article.--Kreivi Wolter 16:42, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 58) ***Indeed, and Alama was a living being capable of feelings, not a droid&mdash;and we don't know exactly what the droid's programming is, so assuming he can even feel fear to begin with is speculative. Likewise, assuming he wasn't afraid of Skywalker is also speculative. What if he was programmed to feel fear, and not show it? The point is we just don't know, so it's too specualtive.
 * 59) ****Better now?--Kreivi Wolter 15:32, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 60) *I'll give it another review once these are fixed. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:27, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 61) Fett returns
 * 62) * "Bane, alongside the sentinel droid, Alama and the droid commandos, headed to the entrance of the building while the rest of the team waited on adjacent tower." The way this sentence is phrased cannot work. Improper comma usage here. If you are attempting to list something, here is the correct way: "Bane, along with the sentinel droid, ALama, and the droid commandos; headed.." Emdashes can also be used as well.
 * 63) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 64) * "Flying to the entrance," He flew?
 * 65) **Sure did : ) --Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 66) * "Once landed, the team were encountered by Senate Commandos, who demanded Bane to surrender." Now you say "landed." However, in the previous sentence you said "Bane," but now you said it was the group who flew. Also what do you mean by "flew" and "landed"? If you are referring to the speeder, "landed" doesn't work here.
 * 67) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 68) *"the center for the control and distribution of power to both the Senate Building and Republic Executive Building" This cannot be sourced to "Hostage Crisis", unless it is actually mentioned in the episode. Check to episode guide too.
 * 69) * "Outside the room, they spotted a Senate commando on guard, whom they quickly targeted with their laser scopes and eliminated with their blaster rifles." Whose "they"?
 * 70) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 71) * "After eliminating the most of the guards with a thermal detonator," Chronologically, I don't understand what you meant here. Where were these "guards", and how did the Sentinel IG-86 droid come into contact with them.
 * 72) **Better now?--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 73) * Please watch your wording, this is grammatically incorrect: "This was interrupted, however, as Bane spotted a Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker in the building, and unsuccessfully attempted to shoot him." "spotted a Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker"? I have seen this recurring problem in the article before, while I was giving this article a copyedit Friday morning.
 * 74) **Oh damn...--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 75) * "The pair rushed to obey" "rushed to obey" seems oddly phrased. Please rephrase.
 * 76) **Better now?--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 77) * I know this falls under ; however, I have seen this occur multiple times in your articles. "As the Jedi had earlier give his lightsaber to his wife Padmé Amidala as a gift," "As" doesn't work here. In order to get a sense of chronological timeframing, you may say "Earlier".
 * 78) **Better now?--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 79) * "Alama then reported back to Bane, who asked about the droid, and after learning the situation, sent Sing to help Alama to capture Skywalker, in which they were successful." Improper comma usages here. Please split this sentence up.
 * 80) **Roger roger.--Kreivi Wolter 09:25, October 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 81) *Another review underway.  JangFett  (Talk) 17:19, October 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 82) There are still many grammar errors. Not only does this fall under the "well-written" requirement under Rule 1, it also makes reviewing the article difficult, as grammar mistakes can leave the actual meaning of some things in question. Please fix these. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:30, October 28, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * If you spot a grammar error on the article, you are welcome to correct it.--Kreivi Wolter 09:31, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * Please note that we are an encyclopedic site, not an English school. We should not have to correct any at all, and if you're learning from the review processes, there should not be any, either.  CC7567  (talk) 16:45, October 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * Sigh. I know you're right. Maybe I should watch more articles and learn from that.--Kreivi Wolter 19:18, October 9, 2009 (UTC)

Koho

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 18:00, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Poor Denal Koho. :(

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support Object
 * 1) -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:19, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 14:14, October 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Koho's ultimate fate remains unknown? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:33, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *Indeed. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 12:13, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Lee strikes again
 * 2) * Please source the quote.
 * 3) * Please source the last sentence in the BtS.
 * 4) * Possible something else will come, but otherwise another good clone GAN. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:05, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **All addressed, Lee; thanks for catching these.
 * 6) Attack of the Clone
 * 7) * You're going to have to find a better source for his death. Neither of the episodes or their guides explicitly confirmed that he died.  CC7567  (talk) 18:16, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **Yeah, I was afraid about this. I'll leave it ambiguous then about Koho's death; however, we know that Denal died.
 * 9) ***It's sounding more and more like you're disregarding the whole review process that we went through (and are still going through, in fact) for Hunting the Hunters III. Being "afraid about this" sounds like you were just hoping that no one would catch it. It's simple: either a source confirms it or it doesn't. Nothing in between. I don't want to see this happen again.  CC7567  (talk) 18:29, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) ****I may but in, but I think meant about being afraid, that his sources don't work and not that no should catch them. Although it is not confirmed it is possible, but his death has no source.-- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:33, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) *****My point about proper source coverage still stands regardless of whatever else happens.  CC7567  (talk) 18:43, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ******I understand your point and apologize. No offense. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:46, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) * An infobox picture, perhaps? I cannot understand why you lack a main picture and yet have one in the body.
 * 14) **Unless you want me to crop a image of him, I cannot get anything decent. He was first seen right behind Rex, and then later he's behind Denal. He's in a very obstructive location.
 * 15) ***You could try asking JMAS if you're unsure about the quality of the image, but you still need an infobox image. Rule 16 states that nominations must "include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available," which indeed they are.  CC7567  (talk) 18:43, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) ****I uploaded a temporary (Or perhaps permanent) infobox image, CC. :)
 * 17) * "Denal told the Duros bounty hunter to surrender, although their capturing of Bane was cut short when they engaged the latter in a duel, which resulted in the death of Denal." This sounds like only Denal and Bane were involved, but then you say "their capturing of Bane."  CC7567  (talk) 18:29, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Addressed; hope that helps.
 * 19) The Grand Master
 * 20) * "...the clones joined Jedi General Anakin Skywalker and his Padawan, Ahsoka Tano." Joined them in what?
 * 21) * "In retaliation, Skywalker soon ordered Rex..." In retaliation aganist what?
 * 22) **Bah, both addressed.
 * 23) * Does any source actually explicitly state/show them engaging in "a duel" with Bane? IIRC, the confrontation, or whatever happened, wasn't shown on-screen at all except for Bane's apparent "death." Also, the fact that Bane escaped the confrontation might be worth mentioning in the article. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:38, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) **Addressed. Thanks for the review, Jonny. :)
 * 25) ***No prob. I'll give it another look-over ASAP. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:11, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) A few more
 * 27) * It's not very clear in the intro if the battle over Devaron and the battle on Bane's ship are the same battles or two separate battles.
 * 28) **Addressed.
 * 29) * "Serving under Captain CC-7567, nicknamed "Rex," the clones joined Jedi General Anakin Skywalker..." Who exactly do you mean by "the clones"? The only ones you've introduced so far are Koho and Rex. Do you mean them? Or are therme more clones involved?
 * 30) **Eh, it should be "Koho." Addressed.
 * 31) ***Ok, but does this mean that Rex joined, too or just Koho? And the meaning of the word "joined" is a little unclear here. Do you just mean he fought alongside them? Or did he meet up with them?
 * 32) ****Hope this is sufficient. :P
 * 33) * Parts of the bio seem to be following the battle more than following Koho. For example, when you start off the second paragraph with "As the clone troopers..." Does this include Koho? Try to tweak parts of this section to make it more from Koho's point of view. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:29, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **Adressed; thanks, Jonny. Sorry for not addressing these eariler. I've been busy.
 * 35) ***No prob; I've been busy lately myself. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 20:54, October 30, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * He didn't speak one word. So no P&T.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:00, October 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * Currently 338 words.  JangFett  (Talk) 15:05, October 30, 2009 (UTC)

Disciples of Twilight

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 03:02, October 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Easy work. No references, since only source is the Legacy Era Campaign Guide. Thanks to Master Jonathan for pre-nom copy-edit and review.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 03:02, October 12, 2009 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 20:52, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 21:54, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:00, November 5, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Grunny:
 * 2) * "although they had yet to defy Krayt and his Empire." This seems a bit redundant considering the previous sentence. Could you either cut it or reword it so it's less redundant? Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:12, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Cut. Thanks for the review, Grunny. :)--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:09, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * "Approximately one millennium after being founded, during the war between the Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Krayt's Sith Empire, deposed Emperor Roan Fel's Empire-in-exile, and the remnants of the Galactic Alliance, the Disciples of Twilight had yet to choose a side." <-- This doesn't flow well in the intro and kind of just sticks out. Particularly the "had yet to choose a side" part, which needs to flow a little better with the information. Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:04, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Please try it now.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:32, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Star Wars: The Essential Atlas Online Companion provides a sector placement for the moon Dyspeth. You should add this to the article. --Eyrezer 09:18, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *Could you take a look at it?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:55, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **I was actually meaning to add the sector placement to the text, but my explanation wasn't very clear. I've changed it to what I had in mind. While the Atlas Companion adds info relevant to the article, as it does not actually mention the Disciples it does not get placed in the Sources section, only in the relevant footnote. Does that make sense? Finally, we don't normally reference the release date, so I removed that reference too. --Eyrezer 20:52, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Thanks, I'll keep that in mind.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:10, October 28, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Alright, I added a "N&R" section, due to a couple new sources. Also added said sources to relative section.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:00, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Second mission to Rodia

 * Nominated by: DjMack 23:30, October 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It could use another image.

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Object Comments
 * 1) Basic stuff
 * 2) * Never copy content directly from what others wrote (in this case me for Cad Bane) in other articles. I can see that the majority of the mission section is a simple copy of what I did myself. It's extremely unprofessional and shows no effort at all.
 * 3) *You have a severe lack of context. Hypothetically speaking, I have no idea who any of the people or objects in the article are. You cannot assume that the reader is familiar with The Clone Wars.
 * 4) **Still remains, especially in the intro.  CC7567  (talk) 21:19, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * Referencing should only be used for every sentence if it comes from a different source.
 * 6) *Nowhere in the episode are Mahtee or Wee Dunn even named, so your sourcing is faulty.
 * 7) **Still remains. Please be consistent.  CC7567  (talk) 21:19, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *There is too much unrelated info in the Aftermath. The article's focus should only be the mission, not brooding on what Bane did later.
 * 9) **Still remains. I see close to no change.  CC7567  (talk) 21:19, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) *I highly recommend reading through some of the current GAs to learn what the expectations are. Also, please do not assume that your work is the "best it can be," as it implies overconfidence and that you have no intention to learn or challenge yourself.  CC7567  (talk) 23:38, October 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **When I meant "best it can be", I didn't mean the writing, I meant content and layout wise. I just used the wrong terms. I will try to take all of your problems into account and fix the article. DjMack 00:36, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ***I've done the best I could to solve the sourcing and context problems.DjMack 01:06, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) ****And actually, I didn't copy your content, it was actually Mauser, who originally wrote the article and I built off what he had. I didn't realize it was copied from the Cad Bane article. DjMack 01:22, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *****It does not matter who copied it. The fact that you did not improve it yourself or write it in your own words does not change a thing.  CC7567  (talk) 02:28, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ******Issues addressed. DjMack 03:24, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *The intro should contain only what is absolutely necessary for the reader's most basic understanding of the article. I see no reason why Zinn Toa should even be mentioned.
 * 17) *Sidious is only a commander if he dictated orders during the mission.
 * 18) *Please do not link to redirects.
 * 19) *You're required to have a sources section. Please learn the rest of Wookieepedia's policies before I continue.
 * 20) *Most of the above objections are normally ones I would fix myself, but as you're new to our expectations, I am posting them all here in the hopes that you will learn from them so that I don't have to reiterate them again for any other of your nominations.  CC7567  (talk) 21:19, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * Issues addressed. DjMack 22:27, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Before I begin my review, please go back and correct these factual errors. While you said "Darth Sidious, the Dark Lord of the Sith and the leader of the Confederacy of Independent Systems," That is false. While, yes he was a Dark Lord of the Sith, he was not the leader of the CIS. Sidious is the de facto leader; Dooku is actually the leader. For Jango Fett, saying "the bounty hunter succeeded in accomplishing both tasks," isn't proper, and I have no clue in what you meant. By giving him context before his name, i.e. Mandalorian bounty hunter Jango Fett, then that's fine.
 * 3) * I don't understand why you're beginning with what happens in Cargo of Doom in the prelude section. You should begin with Bane consulting Sidious via hologram, which was featured in Children of the Force.
 * 4) * "Following his success on Glee Anselm," What do you mean by this? What "success"?
 * 5) * For your BtS, please mention the airdate. It is proper if you begin the BtS with what episode the mission was featured in, the series/season, as well as the airdate. That should be at least one sentence long. After that, you may mention whatever Filoni said in the commentary.
 * 6) * JangFett  (Talk) 02:20, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *I think its appropriate to begin with Holocron Heist/Cargo of Doom since that gives the background on why Sidious is sending him to kidnap children in the first place. DjMack 03:16, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **Issues addressed. DjMack 03:24, October 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Fett II
 * 10) *" His mission was part of his larger agenda during his work for Darth Sidious to capture four of the children listed in the contents of the kyber memory crystal." Quite confusing; please fix this. While I understand that you meant about "was part of his larger agenda"; however, the sentence doesn't flow together.
 * 11) *"...traced the pain the bounty hunter was causing through the force, and so Kenobi was sent to Rodia to protect the child." What "pain"? So they felt something and Obi-Wan was sent? Why Obi-Wan? How come not any other Jedi. You failed to mention that he volunteered to stop Bane.
 * 12) *Your prelude is confusing. I understand that you began with what occured in CotF, per my striked objection above; however, you're confusing your sources. Why are you mentioning Jango Fett, when clearly Sidious never mentioned him? Also, you began talking about Sidious' discussion with Bane in CotF, and then you switch your subject rather quickly and talked about Bane's success above Devaron. I separated the first paragraph in the prelude section for you connivance. Please go back and correct the major problem. Giving it a proper copyedit is rather hard when they're many issues to correct.
 * 13) *The next paragraphs of your prelude need fixing as well. I don't understand chronologically with what's going on. Too much is being said, and it's getting quite redundant. Please pick what's needed and what's not.
 * 14) *"(he was actually describing his own mission)" Do not add your own opinion into articles. This is speculation and/or viewer point-of-view. Please remove this.
 * 15) *"(Bane had in fact killed Ropal)" Same comment as above. Also, mentioning the death of Ropal is redundant in this case.
 * 16) *I'm going to continue the review later. Please go back and fix these problems.  JangFett  (Talk) 23:22, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * Issues addressed. DjMack 21:11, October 24, 2009 (UTC)

Space Battle at Kuat

 * Nominated by: Bvdrunner 18:27, October 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I think it's ready...

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Support
 * 1)  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:26, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Its not. Before beginning any further review, you need to source everything. If you don't really know how to, I'll do it for you. DjMack 21:18, October 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *No; if it appeared once or if the information comes from one source, then you don't need to source anything. It's self-sourcing.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:23, October 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Actually, there is at least one more source, so this article does need to be sourced. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:32, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***So would the First Battle of Kashyyyk (Galactic Civil War) also not meet the requirments for GA status? It also appears solely in EaW but doesn't cite the guide. I don't actually have the guide so if someone else could summerize the information presented in it that would be much appreciated. Bvdrunner 15:26, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Yes, it would not meet the present requirements. Keep in mind, however, that it achieved good status when the rules were not so strict. As for your request, I'll see what the guide has to say. Now that you've brought the issue up, I think I'll also fix the Kashyyyk battle. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 15:39, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *****Thanks QuiGonJinn, that would be great. How much extra and relevent information is actually in the guide?Bvdrunner 02:53, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ******In the interests of making this a learning experience, try it yourself. Lol keep it quiet though, it might not be legal. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:25, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *******Thanks for that. I gave it a shot. It is now sourced with the main updates being the information regarding the Sundered Hearts weakening of the fighters and the fact that the canisters were not gas but "orbital resource" canisters. I also put in the Databank source for the Incom info. Bvdrunner 03:23, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *I believe this objection has been taken care off.Bvdrunner 00:37, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) QGJ
 * 11) * First of all, what is the source for the "c. 0.6 BBY" date? I don't remember the game being that specific in terms of chronology.
 * 12) **I also couldn't find it. It was a layover from a previous editor. Fixed. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) * Rebel casualties: None. Are you sure? Isn't it possible for some of the escorting corvettes to be destroyed?
 * 14) **See above. Fixed. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ***We generally try to avoid words like "unknown" in articles. I'd advise you to just leave that section blank.
 * 16) ****Done as well. Bvdrunner 00:37, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) * Give some context for Emergency Code Zero.
 * 18) **Done. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * You need to create articles for the Kuat communications officer and the Tyranny commander, so they can be linked in this article.
 * 20) **Redlinked for now. I'll write them tomorrow. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **Done. See Unidentified Kuat communications officer and Unidentified Tyranny commander. Bvdrunner 00:34, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) * &hellip;whose careless commander had allowed to come out of hyperspace with the shields down. "Careless" is rather POV-ish.
 * 23) **I agree. I fixed some NPOV stuff earlier but missed this. Fixed. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) * &hellip;the Rebels figured that they then had a clear shot at attacking Fresia. This is rather colloquial. Please reword.
 * 25) **Fixed. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) * Expand the "Behind the scenes" section. See the aforementioned Battle of Kashyyyk for an example. You also need to mention that the battle was identified as "Space Battle of Kuat" in the Prima Guide.
 * 27) **Fixed. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) *Nice job for a first attempt. However, please watch your linking; each item must be linked once in the intro, once in the infobox and once in the main body of the article.
 * 29) **I don't see any remaining problems. Thanks for the advice. Bvdrunner 03:33, October 26, 2009 (UTC) QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 11:29, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) Fett
 * 31) *Missing date in the intro and prelude. Be sure to include this, and source the date in the prelude section. I'll give this another review later on. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 00:41, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) **Dates added. Bvdrunner 04:28, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) The Grand Master
 * 34) *"However, a serious complication arose when Antilles and his taskforce entered into the Fre'ji system and detected the Imperial I-class Star Destroyer Tyranny in orbit around Fresia." What serious complication arose? (If the "complication" refers to the Tyranny, then this should be reworded to better reflect this.)
 * 35) *The aftermath should be shortened a bit. It's a little too detailed on the following mission.
 * 36) *Great work for a first nom :). Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:15, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) **All adressed. I hope that the reduction of the aftermath was sufficient enough. Only that one sentence seemed irrelevent and I added a link to the battle it referenced. Bvdrunner 05:51, November 6, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Ky'lessan

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:05, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: An alien species not beginning with an S. I know I'm going to regret this…

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Support
 * 1) Not only does their name not start with S, they can't even pronounce S! You've done it now, Skippy! ~ SavageBob 06:36, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:23, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 08:39, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:42, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Just checking the intro quote and the word "thirs". Is that "s" actually in the soure? Since he doesn't usually pronounce "s". Or is this isolated to plurals. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:51, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Yeth it ith. Added info on exceptions for their lisp. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:31, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I have absolutely not idea what what you wrote means, but I take it you know what you're doing. :) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:23, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) The Grand Master
 * 6) *In the intro you say Snake-Eyes was the "right-hand sentient" of Bloodhawk, and betrayed his partner for profit; however, in the main body, you never identify Bloodhawk as his partner, nor do you specify that he "betrayed her for profit"; only that he kidnapped her. Remember, no information should be present only in the intro.
 * 7) *Also, "right-hand sentient" sounds a little too colloquial.
 * 8) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:19, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Both done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:55, November 6, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

W'iiri

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 08:03, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: One more

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  JangFett  (Talk) 22:31, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Why is it when I read the word "scuttle" I instantly think of Doctor Zoidberg?  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:04, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Hmm. I had no idea the Drall were first introduced in the Daley novels. ~ SavageBob 00:34, October 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:18, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 06:02, November 6, 2009 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Skippy Farlstendoiro.
 * 2) * Context for J'uoch.
 * 3) * History: "A number of W'iiri worked for J'ouch. (…) The W'iiri, being a trusted employee, was issued". You start talking about several W'iiri and then you seem to change your mind and talk about only one individual. Do you mean "One of the W'iiri, being a trusted employee"?
 * 4) *" Nearly all the other droids were destroyed shortly after." Doesn't seem relevant for the W'iiri. Could you reword this? Maybe "Allies of these W'iiri destroyed all the other droids shortly after" (if that's what happened).
 * 5) *That all. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:29, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Dealt with the later two. --Eyrezer 04:36, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **And now the third too. --Eyrezer 10:10, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Nartian

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 08:13, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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Support
 * 1) Very interesting. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 22:38, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) "Historic day" sounded POVish to me, so I cut it, but I won't cry if you want to put it back. :) ~ SavageBob 04:47, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * So, I'll have to do a multi-armed species to balance your work? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:23, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 08:58, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy Farlstendoiro
 * 2) * You describe Nartians as traditionally serving noble families. Should you mention, when describing Nackhar, that Wuher and Chalmun are not exactly the aristocrats Nartians commonly serve?
 * 3) * Nackhar's article says that he "also ran a fast-food stand in the Mos Eisley marketplace." Is it true? If it is, can it be included in the article?
 * 4) *You've got quite an obsession with multi-armed species, don't you? ;P--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:36, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Ok. I've added the fast-food vendor bit. Re aristocrats: I added a bit to the final sentence in the History section, which clarifies your point and then also located Tatooine in Arkanis, so it is clear it is not one of the Senex worlds. How does it look now? --Eyrezer 03:22, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Thanks for the review, JangFett. I removed the "planet of" however. A personal preference. :) --Eyrezer 23:16, October 19, 2009 (UTC)

Aaron

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 08:13, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: What a great name for a planet.

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Support
 * 1)  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:39, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Planets with Biblical names. The next trend?--Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:44, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *Naphtali? --Eyrezer 13:00, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ** xxx? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:23, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Interesting find! ~ SavageBob 14:27, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 08:53, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) I created the page. Zakor1138 20:03, November 5, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 2) * Just one for now: Don't forget your "Sources" section! ~ SavageBob 14:33, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Well, the planets not actually mentioned in the Atlas, only the system, but we seem to be treating the Atlas Appendix as signifying simultaneously a planet and a system, so I'll add it in. :P --Eyrezer 22:14, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Maybe you should mention that the game itself does not specify that Aaron is a planet; it is only established in the Atlas.  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 05:28, October 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *Done. --Eyrezer 08:51, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Skippy Farlstendoiro:
 * 7) * Hist: "The Fromm Gang facility on Aaron had eight levels." Are you 100% sure? I understand that the game features eight levels but, could the IU facility have more levels? Or does the game show the ceiling, floor, and wall of the building? (Like with the Jawa sandcrawler in Super Star Wars
 * 8) * Bts: "Aaron is the setting for a video game released in 1988" Could you mention the name of the game somewhere in BtS?
 * 9) *You're having great fun with the Atlas, don't you? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:19, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) **Done, done, and yes I am. --Eyrezer 12:30, October 21, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Dying ceremony

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:28, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Well, it's not technically a Hidden One..." Jujiggum runs for cover anyway. Also, the first ceremony nom

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Support
 * 1) Interesting nom comment, Jonny. ;)  JangFett  (Talk) 17:33, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:37, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 08:25, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

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Belth Allusis

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:56, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: What am I doing in the Old Republic era? I don't know; I just liked the character&hellip;

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Support
 * 1) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:32, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) TONIGHT, WE DINE ON BOTHAWUI! Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 04:29, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 08:21, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * QGJ, I love the character, and I love the writing style. Great article. Very nice :) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:09, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) *Glad you liked it :) QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:20, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I'm all for people branching out. Thought about trying a species? --Eyrezer 23:26, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *I've been thinking about that, actually. Some day&hellip;who knows? QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:20, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Keep up the good work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:09, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) * "Despite being gradually outnumbered..." Are you sure "gradually" is the correct word? It doesn't seem to make sense here.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * P&a section, please. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:14, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **There's no available information for the P&A. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:20, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***I have taken the liberty of adding it myself. It may seem to have only obvious information, but as long as there is any information, it is required by the LG. If there is an appropriate quote for the section go ahead and add it, and if there is any information that needs to be adjusted, please do so. Let me know when you're done or if there's nothing more that needs to be done, and I will strike and support. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:46, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Yeah, I pretty much consider what you've added unnecessary fluff that just restates facts from the bio and does not describe any "powers" and "abilities" whatsoever. However, if you consider that to be appropriate, so be it, I'm not going to argue. I've made some adjustments, and as I fail to find any appropriate quotes, this objection should be addressed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:00, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *****I understand, although I disagree; but either way, thank you for your cooperation. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:09, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Unidentified male Devaronian minister

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:26, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first TCW season two project; weighing in at just under 300 words as of the nomination

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Support
 * 1) Nice to see another WP:TCW project from you, Jonny. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 17:25, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:27, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 08:18, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

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Comments

Metellos Exchange

 * Nominated by: Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 12:17, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I didn't want to fluff it over 1000 words for FAN; it stands at just over 900. I also wasn't writing this with the intention of GAing it but, I wrote it like that anyway. Why not?

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 * 1) Wanna see more of these&hellip;--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:28, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I'm probably doing economics next year. Maybe then I'll have some idea what you wrote :P SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:00, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) I'll review the article in full shortly. Taking a glance at it though, I do suggest you add a couple other images to it, such as one of Gryph as the professor, or something.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:08, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added File:Metellos 3.jpg and, to kill two birds with one stone, File:Slyssk confronts plaarvin.jpg. Thanks for the suggestion. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 19:25, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Here we go
 * 4) * ?In the intro, the second & third sentences begin with "It". Can you change one of them?
 * 5) **Changed the latter one.
 * 6) * The Mandalorian Wars need to be mentioned somewhere; I'd like to see it mentioned in both intro and body. For example, the Metellos Exchange was auctioning trade franchises with the planet Mandalore for after the war ended.
 * 7) **Mentioned in intro and body.
 * 8) * I would also like to see the fact that Nunk Plaarvin was a Ephant Mon. Perhaps in the intro, but definitely in the body.
 * 9) **I added the Ephant Mon link in the 3rd paragraph of "History", please try to move it in a earlier spot.
 * 10) ***Ephant Mon is an individual. He and Nunk are Chevin and that is mentioned in the first sentence of the "Concept" section. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:57, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ****(Smacks head). I apologize.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:26, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * I believe it wouldn't hurt to state that Jarael was a female Arkanian offshoot.
 * 13) **Done.
 * 14) * Context needed for Slyssk.
 * 15) **YEEP! I had already given him a bit of context (former member of Raff Syndicate) so I added that he was a Trandoshan. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:57, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) ***Thanks, that's what I wanted to see.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:26, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *That's all I have for now. Gutsy move, nominating a corporation. Never could fully understand economics.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:53, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thanks for the review Kasra, luckily I study economics :P. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:57, October 29, 2009 (UTC)

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Sonam-Ha'ar

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:20, October 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: He has a fine beard.

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 * 1) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:16, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Quixotic Jedi must be inspired in him. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:42, November 2, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Just a couple&hellip;
 * 2) * What are the species of these Jedi? Memit Nadill, Odan-Urr.
 * 3) **I don't think its really relevant.
 * 4) ***Alright, then.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:16, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * In the Appearances section, could you only put the comics in which he actually appeared, rather that the overall arc?
 * 6) **Addressed.
 * 7) *Otherwise, looks good.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:35, November 1, 2009 (UTC)

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Titterbug

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 21:57, October 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: More nonsense from me! ~ SavageBob 21:57, October 31, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Hee hee. Titterbug. Seriously though, nice work.
 * 2) --Eyrezer 21:57, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  JangFett  (Talk) 23:01, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Not a 50th for you, but...--Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:56, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) It would be really good to get an image of the Titterbug alongside another individual to get a sense of scale. --Eyrezer 04:22, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Skippy Farlstendoiro. Heya, Bob
 * 3) * Can you create an article for "the pit" ?
 * 4) * BtS: Any voice actor for any Titterbug? Even if unknown, I strongly believe you should mention it ("voiced by an uncredited actor"). Reason: No quote from any Titterbug. The text mentions only that they laugh. I cannot know for sure wether the Titterbug princess was voiced by a performer or only by some effects.
 * 5) * Chap-chap! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:56, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **As for "the pit," I thought about making an article for it, but then I decided that no more than a line or two could be written about it, and it was better to just include such information into the article Gorphs' grotto. I have added a bit about the tittering princess; it's unclear from the cartoon whether it is a male or female voice artist, so I couldn't use a gendered term like "voice actor" or "voice actress." Thanks for the review! ~ SavageBob 03:33, November 3, 2009 (UTC)

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Tuknatan

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:02, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Graaaaawk!

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 * 1) Graawk! Graawk! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:54, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:01, November 3, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Skippy Farlstendoiro versus the aliens
 * 2) * Per precedent, "unidentified" should not be used in IU articles.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Biography, first paragraph: Two almost consecutive uses of the word "However". Try to reword one.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Can you explain why a large portion of the Sith force disappeared? I mean: Sadow was concentrating to create the illusions, and Gav Daragon broke his concentration.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) *I've done sofixit here and there in the article, hope you don't mind. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:35, November 2, 2009 (UTC)

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19,000 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:00, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Insert pithy comment here.

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 * 1) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:20, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:34, November 5, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) *"Outside the galactic disc, on Kamino, the isolated world underwent a dramatic climate change." Reword this. gives the impression that the isolated world and Kamino are separate entities. That's all, good work.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:02, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Tweaked. Thanks, Floyd. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Farlstendoiro and the Old Times
 * 4) * Intro: "East" is in inverted commas; I understand why. Could you reword the sentence to avoid unsual usage ?
 * 5) **Ok, I do not see the violation considering the colloquial nature of it from an in-universe perspective, but I'll relent. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * The galaxy in: This paragraph has two distinct parts: about Kamino and about elsewhere. Could you divide the section in two paragraphs? Also, Impact.
 * 7) **I do understand why you ask this and thought long about this. Why it was left alone: This was done to prevent short paragraphs that would not meet proper English writing conventions. The Impact section would have a violating paragraph due to number of sentences. To keep the parallel construction&mdash;as well as the fact that the second paragraph of The galaxy... would also be in violation due to sentence structure&mdash;it is best to leave them together as one. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * Footnotes: Could you replace "Simple math" with some other expression?
 * 9) **This was used as provided in WP:NOR and has been used for all the other dates that have been made into GAs to qualify that simple (or basic) math was used to derive the information rather than original research. I am just complying with the guidelines. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) *Good work. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:25, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thank you, Skippy.

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18,780 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:00, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: We are never informed how the tower was destroyed. I wish we did know. It would have made this article much juicier.

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 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:05, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:09, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Hee hee hee&hellip;--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:58, November 5, 2009 (UTC)

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Shar Dakhan

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:47, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Heh. I was worried that I couldn't get this over 250 words.

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 * 1) For Farlstendoiro!
 * 2) *No quotes?
 * 3) *..."ruled over the world of Ch'hodos, which served as his central base,[1] located in the northern part of the Unknown Regions...[2]" I understand you want to reduce footnotes to a minimum, which is laudable, but I suggest rewording this sentence, as it seems that "his base is located in the northern part".
 * 4) *"were repelled and eventually defeated." This seems important, do we know any details? Battle, opposing commanders, anything?
 * 5) * Nice. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:20, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

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Kadir (Tarisian)

 * Nominated by: SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:31, November 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Did someone order more KOTOR minor NPC's?

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 * 1) The 100% game completion section was one of his more exciting days. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 10:02, November 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) He has an image and everything. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:16, November 6, 2009 (UTC)

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 * Quote from 70.59.73.30: Kadir rules!!! He is the best character in the game. He talks about the Cantina every five seconds and he begins shouting in the middle of a sentence! I agree. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:31, November 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * I removed the links to "South Apartments", they redirect to Upper City. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 10:02, November 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * Actually I plan to create that article, after I discuss a few notability issues with Cylka when she's back. That's why I put the link in. I'm afraid I'll forget if I wait for the article to actually go up. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:23, November 6, 2009 (UTC)