Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Hand of Judgment

Hand of Judgment

 * Nominated by: Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 18:34, August 21, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:As I have said, I find these guys to be absolutely adorable, though I think they would be mortally offended by such a statement. Anyway they deserve an article worth the FA status and I intend to make it so.

Support

 * 1) Plagueis327 (talk) 18:44, September 6, 2012 (UTC)

Jangeth

 * At a glance, is there any way that you could insert some more images within the article's sections? Something relating to the text.  JangFett  (Talk) 02:42, September 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * I got something added to the history section, but finding something for the "Members" sections is a hard nut, as they are wearing the armor and helmets in every picture and only Brightwater can be easily identified in his scout helmet.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 07:44, September 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * That's fine then. The image for the section "Becoming the Hand of Judgment" mentions Luke in the caption, but he's nowhere to be found in that image. Possibly you could find a different image?  JangFett  (Talk) 15:31, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * I tried, but there was nothing of the three of them, and just the three of them I could find. Usual combinations were Luke, Han, Obi-Wan and Chewbacca, or Han, Leia and Chewbacca, and a lot of other out-of-the-topic characters.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:42, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * hmm there's always searching through the OT films. If you find a scene, you could tell Culator and he could possibly upload a blu ray shot of it. I think ROTJ has Luke-Han-Chewie shots IIRC.  JangFett  (Talk) 15:45, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * I'll try that. Starting with ANH, actually as it is closer to the correct time, and Luke still has the blue bladed lightsaber. In case I find something, where he uses it, you know. I'll get back to you in about two hours.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:59, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * I got two options. One from 1h 01min 05sec and another 1h 53min 51sec and I took screenshots from my dvd, but Culator's blu ray is likely to be higher quality so I'll ask him to replace them when he has time.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 18:21, September 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * Yup, looks good. Either one could work.  JangFett  (Talk) 22:00, September 4, 2012 (UTC)

Floyd

 * For a non-native English speaker, you did a solid job. Still, a good copyedit could be useful.
 * Thanks. Culator did one way back when I first put this up for a nom, but I haven't heard of him since then.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 09:25, September 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * I'm an amateur compared to some of our more accomplished copyeditors. I suggest you ping someone like MJ or Hanzo. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 17:32, September 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * I appreciate your help and advice, Culator, but MJ isn't taking request right now, if I understand correctly, and I don't know who Hanzo is, so can't ask him. Oh, and thanks for the better quality image, it is nice.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 19:28, September 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * I think I figured out who Hanzo is. I only got the idea of searching his name from other FANs after I said I don't know who you are talking about.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 19:52, September 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: "but the stormtrooper had turned tables on Drelfin" How so?
 * Done--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 09:25, September 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * Context on Han and Luke in the intro.
 * Done--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 09:25, September 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * "Rebel" and "Imperial" and such should always be capitalized.
 * I think I got them all.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 13:23, September 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * I'll continue once you finish these, most importantly the copyedit.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 21:42, September 26, 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for advice. I wish someone would do the copyedit voluntarily without me pestering them around to do that.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 09:25, September 27, 2012 (UTC)

Hanzo

 * Prelims: Context needed for everything. For example, Executor needs to be specifically identified as an Executor-class Star Dreadnought, and you mentioned the events being after the Battle of Yavin in the intro, but never mention that in the article itself.
 * Both done. For the other things needing more context you need to be more specific, because I don't know what you mean by "everything".--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 16:38, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * Still didn't mention anything about the Battle of Yavin in the bio. Also, I feel like the body should start with mentioning that the stormtroopers were stationed on the Reprisal, rather than just directly talk about what the Reprisal did, as this is not the Teardrop massacre article. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:20, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * I do mention it, section "Becoming Hand of Judgment", third paragraph, first sentence. It is used to give a timeline, the battle itself has nothing to do with anything. I'll see what I can do about that other thing concerning the Reprisal.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 06:52, October 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * Better now?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:29, October 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * This might be a sofixit, but please use the template for the behind the scenes citations on the entries. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:26, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * I'm very, very, very bad with specialized cite templates so if I mess it up, please fix it. But I'll try to do it myself first, because that's how I learn these things.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 16:00, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay, I think it looks about right, but could you please take a look if I did do something wrong?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 16:14, October 3, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

 * Intro: The connection between Cav'Saran's people and the swoop gang led the stormtroopers on a trail of BloodScar pirates who had been recruiting other illegal groups in Shelsha sector. - what connection? You haven't established one.
 * The connection they discovered there. Fixed.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:46, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: who had arrived there to learn more about the earlier action which took place there - can you be more specific here? The wording is loose and vague.
 * That better?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:46, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: Context for Drunost, Gepparin, Millennium Falcon, Troukee, Admonitor
 * Did I get them all?--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:46, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: Specify who the crew of the Falcon are.
 * Done--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:46, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: Jade covered LaRone and his companions against a member of the 501st Legion - covered how? Covering fire? Covered their presence?
 * Fixed--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:46, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: When Jade got another mission which involved infiltrating the governmental palace - specify where.
 * Done--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 14:46, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Going rogue: Context for Ozzel; captain of what?
 * Reprisal, done--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:02, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Going rogue: article for the city that was the site of the Teardrop massacre is needed.
 * Created redlink, writing something in it asap--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:02, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Going rogue: was there a reason why the ISB ordered the Imperials to open fire on Teardrop?
 * I need to check the novel for that, and I don't have it with me. I get back to you about it as soon as I can.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:02, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Going rogue: the killing Dreflin makes no mention of a back-up weapon like the intro states. Which is correct?
 * The back-up weapon is. Fixed.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:02, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Going rogue: Context for Drunost
 * Done--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 15:02, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * Becoming the Hand of Judgment: Context for Ranklinge
 * Becoming the Hand of Judgment: the meeting with the 2 Humans and Wookiee and the confrontation with pirates in the Purnham system needs more detail. How did they follow them? Did the humans and Wookiee have a ship? What kind of battle occured?
 * Becoming the Hand of Judgment: What happened at the Battle of Yavin that was so important?
 * Becoming the Hand of Judgment: Why was Ozzel afraid that Jade had found out about the stormtroopers?
 * Working for the Emperor's Hand: The faked military registry information, allowing them to land unchallenged at Greencliff Regional Spaceport. I presume this is refering to the Gillia, and not the Executor? Please be specific.
 * Working for the Emperor's Hand: Context for 501st Legion
 * Working for the Emperor's Hand: where did Caaldra come from during the infiltration of the governor's palace on Shelkowna? She just pops in out of nowhere.
 * Working for the Emperor's Hand: Who is Disra, and what plot was he behind?
 * Working for the Emperor's Hand: what happened to the Millennium Falcon? Last we see, Chewie brings it back, but no further mention is made of it, and its isn't clear that they all travel in one ship.
 * Going out with a bang: Context on Elegasso, Pickerin
 * Going out with a bang: Skywalker is mentioned as being blamed for the murder of the governor, but the governor is still alive. Please clarify.
 * Protecting the Governor: where did Axlon come from?
 * Protecting the Governor: Axlon describes his reasons for doing what he was doing to the Hand. Please tell us what his plan was as well.
 * Protecting the Governor: stormtrooper armor piled on Ferrouz? Please state this earlier, and the reason for this.
 * New career: who need to mention earlier that the Hand's attackers in the tapcafe are Nuso Esva's troops.
 * New career: The Troukree&mdash;who had some back up waiting outside the tapcafe&mdash;prevented the plan. They also turned off the jamming device their enemies had been using. - which Troukee did this? The backup or that ones in the tapcafe? Also, what jamming device?
 * New career: Context for Admonitor - Cavalier One FarStar.svg( Squadron channel ) 13:07, November 6, 2012 (UTC)

Comments
I would appreciate if someone did a full copy-edit to the article to root out all my idiotic "non-native-english-speaker-mistakes". Thanks for all the feedback in advance!--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 18:34, August 21, 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:26, October 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks, Hanzo. Very much appreciated.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 16:15, October 3, 2012 (UTC)

Are you absolutely sure it isn't Hand of Judgement? Nevermind, the Complete Encyclopedia confirmed it...move along... Winterz (talk) 17:16, October 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * I've spelled it like that many times, too, but the current one seems to be the official one.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 17:42, October 10, 2012 (UTC)

I've got a graduation ceremony coming up in UK on Friday, so I will be away from home for several days. I'm not certain what kind of Internet service our hotel provides, so I don't know if I can get to read Wookieepedia while there, and obviously I won't be having any novels or other source material with me. I'll deal with anything that comes up when I get back, asap. It should still say inside the normal, acceptable time to deal with any objections.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 08:39, November 6, 2012 (UTC)