Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Traavis


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Traavis

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:50, March 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Insert funny comment about this dude being named after Karen Traviss here&hellip;--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:50, March 11, 2010 (UTC)

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 17:12, March 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:23, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) With a name like Skippy Farlstendoiro, I cannot make fun of anyone's name. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:02, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:37, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:44, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) -- 1358  (Talk) 19:34, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Cylka  -talk- 01:32, March 23, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Are we allowed to object to terrible naming choices?
 * 2) * "skirmish between the clones and the Separatist battle droids." A little context on the fighting forces.
 * 3) **Well, the comic begins in the aftermath of said skirmish, so I don't really know if I could give any context for this.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I mean that there is no context that the clones fight for the Republic or that the droids fight for the Confederacy. Something like saying "a skirmish between the Grand Army of the Republic and the Confederacy's droid army"
 * 5) ****Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:44, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Context on Supreme Chancellor Palpatine in the intro.
 * 7) **Are you looking for something about his status as a Sith Lord? If so, I really don't think it's needed, it would be different if it just said "Palpatine", but I think Supreme Chancellor is enough context.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Not really, I mean it seems out of place to name him in an article that doesn't go into the motivations behind 66. After thinking about it, his name should probably just be removed.
 * 9) ****Normally I would just go ahead an do it, but the other Order 66-related character articles have Palpatine in the intros, and not saying who the Chancellor is would probably not look right.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:44, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *****Alright. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:20, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) * "Traavis, now a Jedi Knight..." He was part of the Jedi Order?
 * 12) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) * "During the clones' mission, Traavis received news that General Grievous, the Supreme Commander of the Separatist Droid Army, had been killed." This seems a bit tacked on the paragraph. Reword it a bit.
 * 14) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) ***Better. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 20:46, March 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * In the article, it refers to his troops as "the Aiwha Squad." is this the IU wasy to say it? If not it should simply be "Aiwha Squad."
 * 17) **I honestly don't see the problem, it's not as if I'm referring to a person. I don't think I can say, for instance, "Palpatine ordered Aiwha Squad", no&hellip; there needs to be a "the" there. I'll double-check the comic and the CSWE, though.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***On a side note, I've removed all references to "the" before Aiwha Squad. They are not needed, and look out of place. Rejigging of sentences has eliminated most of them in any case. Compare it to starfighter squadron naming; generally Rogue Squadron is refered to as "Rogue Squadron", not "the Rogue Squadron". - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 17:12, March 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****Alright, noted for future reference.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 01:44, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * This isn't really an objection, but is there any way to get either a picture of his death or of his lightsaber? They would make great additions to his Bio and Bts respectively.
 * 21) **I'll ask around for scans from Volume 4.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *At least he went out like a punk. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:27, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **Tru dat. Thanks for the review, Naru.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:16, March 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) Soresu
 * 25) * During the Clone Wars—the conflict between the Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems—Traavis, by then a Jedi Knight serving the Jedi Order as a General in the Grand Army of the Republic. Without the dash, it effectively reads During the Clone Wars Traavis, by then a Jedi Knight serving the Jedi Order as a General in the Grand Army of the Republic.
 * 26) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) * He also congratulated Aiwha Squad for successfully completing their mission. Really meh IMO. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:06, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) **I'm not so sure about this. I think it is important to state this. Could you try it? Thanks for the review, BTW.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) ***You can state what you want in the P&T, as long as you can extrapolate something about his personality from it. Maybe just put that he was grateful of the squad's work, instead of just stating something tht he did. In any case, made sure is repetitive ATM. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:17, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ****Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:41, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) Look, his birthplace was named after me
 * 32) * During the Clone Wars—the conflict between the Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems—Traavis, by then a Jedi Knight serving the Jedi Order as a General in the Grand Army of the Republic. This sentence needs a verb.
 * 33) **Taken care of.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) * a five month campaign. I might be wrong but, shouldn't be "a five-month campaign"? I don't fix it myself because I'm not sure.
 * 35) **Fixed.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) * P&T: You use "also" twice almost in a row. Suggestion: Remove or change one.
 * 37) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 38) * BtS: Probably some actor or model provided his face for Traviss in Insider. Can't you find information on that person's name?
 * 39) **Looked for the online supplements for the issue, and those links aren't available. The issue itself says nothing.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 40) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:57, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) **Thanks for the review, Skippy!--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:52, March 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 42) Toprawa:
 * 43) * The BTS should do a little more to explain the origin of the "real" picture used to depict the character, seen in the infobox, since he first appeared in the comic as an illustration. And, is there no further information regarding this? I'm guessing this is an unused production photo from Episode II or III. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:13, March 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) **There wasn't any info that I could find. In the BTS, would I call this a live-action image or something?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:42, March 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) ***I think just calling it a picture of a "live actor" would suffice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:04, March 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 46) ****Ok, thanks. Please try it, and thanks for the review.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 04:40, March 22, 2010 (UTC)

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