Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Cane Adiss


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Cane Adiss

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 08:04, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The Governor lady said "I'm sending in more trains!"

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:15, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Following IRC based objections, arguements, and eventual realisation of wrongness. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 10:23, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) I have reviewed this article and give it my stamp of approval. For what it's worth. jSarek 07:56, 9 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Greyman ( Talk ) 01:25, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:15, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Oh, this is a 4dot nom... umm, okay, random obscure reference, random obscure reference... uh: "When supper time came, the old cook came on deck, sayin' 'Fellows, it's too rough to feed ya'!"  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 20:18, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 1)  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 14:20, 20 June 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Secret Rebel Base of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * Not sure if the part about the ship being able to contain his bulky body is needed.
 * 3) **Normally, no, but it is a plot point in this case, since few ships were actually able to do the job. And later on he has to try and buy one which is big enough for him and is more expensive and so on and so forth.
 * 4) * "...much to the disappointment his parental collective." A word is missing and some context on a prental collective might be needed. I think it would go better here than in the intro because it wouldn't interrupt the flow.
 * 5) **Added that missing word. As for the parental collective, there really isn't any more info on them, at least, not that I'm aware of.
 * 6) * "...a solid set of piloting skills." I don't like the way this is phrased.
 * 7) **Rephrased.
 * 8) * "...which is what greeted the smuggler..." I assume you meant which greeted.
 * 9) **Kinda. I've rephrased that again, but I'm not totally positive that the new wording works.
 * 10) *Nice work overall. This John Hazlett fellow created quite an interesting character.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:05, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 14:12, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Any time.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:15, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) From the two heads of Ackbar:
 * 14) * There's a bit of repetition in phrasing between the main body and the intro. E.g. Intro: "&hellip;much to the dismay of his parental collective. When he came of age&hellip;" Bio: "&hellip;much to the disappointment of his parental collective. When he came of age&hellip;" and "was large enough to accommodate"/"was large enough to accommodate".
 * 15) **Removed that repetition.
 * 16) * That's it, really. Not an objection, but it is policy (though I'm not sure one is needed) to use "s's" instead if "s'," so I've altered them. Also, according to Gonk there's supposed to be commas either side of "however" in a sentence like "Spacecraft were expensive however, and Adiss&hellip;" I've fixed it; just letting you know for future reference.
 * 17) **Heh. I've never, ever seen "s's" in use in the real world except for up in the country where they don't know better. I physically can't bring myself to do it..sorry. :P Also, with that "however," I always used to put the comma before it, but someone complained...can't win. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 08:20, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ***The s's construction is acceptable in some cases; see this discussion of the topic. My experience has led me to generally use s's with proper names whose ending "s" isn't a "z" sound. But this is also one of those cases where it's probably just as acceptable to go with Adiss'.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 20:10, 19 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ****For our own discussion on the topic, see here. jSarek 18:23, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) **Excellent article, interesting character. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:38, 18 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments


 * 9... Thefourdotelipsis 08:04, 31 May 2008 (UTC)