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Derek Klivian

 * Nomination by: - Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My other summer nom. Image replacement by Red is ongoing. Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/1 users/6 total)
Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 00:22, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Hugetastic. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:24, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:33, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Witty message here. Cull Tremayne 15:30, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) User:Camodroid11 16:42, 2nd january 2008 9(utc)
 * 6)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 21:28, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The SOTE section doesn't seem to mention Klivian specifically at all. Does something specifically say he was present there? There seems to be a few areas where you mention the Rogues as a group and not Klivian as an individual, and the same question applies. If he's not, then I think it might be just a bit too much of a stretch, especially when you're committing that level of detail. "Organa" is rather abruptly re-introduced in the Mission to Mrlsst section - this should probably be tweaked. And I'm counting 5 redlinks. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Redlinks reduced within acceptable limits. Leia reintroduced. The Rogues thing is a general "We know he was in the squadron at this time, we know the full squadron was here, ergo he was here, though we'll keep it fairly generic." Havac 04:51, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Right. I get what you're saying, but since nothing is explicitly stating that he was there, I think that at least the SOTE section could but cut down. Thefourdotelipsis 23:43, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Stuff
 * 5) * "Klivian's fears proved unfounded as Antilles and Calrissian made their way through the Death Star to its main reactor and destroyed it, killing Darth Vader and Galactic Emperor Palpatine." If you're going to source this to RotJ, then I'm not sure that I can agree with this sentence. The film doesn't really show either of them dying as the result of the Death Star's destruction.
 * 6) * Under Victory at Endor: "By that time, Klivian had built a reputation for frequent crashes, and his friends joked about his supposed affection for bacta treatments." Can you choose a different lead-in? Only because you mentioned his reputation earlier under Rogue: "He quickly developed a joking reputation for enjoying bacta due to his numerous crashes and injuries". Obviously both statements are sourced to different books/times, but in the article he already had that reputation, and him building it up even further is kinda confusing, especially with no further crashes really specified.
 * 7) **I agree that they are in two different contexts, but I'd still recommend a reword of the second mention, since "By that time" implies that he didn't have that reputation before, which obviously isn't true in the context of the article. Cull Tremayne 01:17, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Under Mission to Mrlsst: "Antilles prepared a strike on the Imperial base while Loro led a commando mission to rescue Leia Organa, whose presence on-world and capture one of Loro's fighters, Vance Rego, had reported." What does the last part of this sentence mean? Rego captured "Organa" or something? Obviously confused by Rego's double-cross, but still no idea what's going on in this sentence.
 * 9) *I'm about halfway through, just hampered by other stuff. Cull Tremayne 16:14, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * Under Kidnapping on Corellia, last section: "Their ship was underarmed for dealing with the attackers, but Horn intervened in his X-wing, shooting down the attackers." Can we get a synonym for one of those "the attackers"?
 * 11) * Under Extracting the Emperor: "Klivian had been enjoying some downtime, attempting to pick up women at the base pool with Janson, but Pestage had fled the manipulations of Director of Imperial Intelligence Ysanne Isard on Coruscant and been imprisoned" Can this be reworded somewhat? I realize that the sentence is trying to tell us how Klivian's romantic pursuits were interrupted by the Pestage mission, but as is, it sort of reads that Pestage's conflict with Isard is somehow related to Hobbie's poolside activities.
 * 12) * Per your response to objections on the 181st FAN, would you object to creating a redlink for the false 181st? In the same vein, a link to the false Harran might be appropriate as well, even though the current article combined both characters.
 * 13) *No prostitute link or a pic of Klivian with a Bothan escort? I am shocked, sir, shocked. Cull Tremayne 05:11, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) AdmirableAckbar:
 * 15) *" longtime friend...good friend" in the intro is a tad repetitive; see if you can replace one of them with something else.
 * 16) **Revocabulariated. Havac 04:33, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) * "but felt it wise to remain silent on the matter..." - we don't know why, do we? It just sort of reads oddly at the minute, like the reader's supposed to know why.
 * 18) **I've broadened the statement a little to suggest his motivation better. Havac 04:33, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * Could we get an actual picture of the mutiny itself in the "Mutiny..." section, if there is one? Or something more illustrative than Biggs and Hobbie standing facing each other? A crop of Image:SWEMP9-FC.jpg might be good.
 * 20) **That cover doesn't depict anything that actually happened, and there isn't any art of Klivian in the mutiny itself. Havac 04:33, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***Fair enough. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:45, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) * The reflist looks a bit messy at the minute. I think you should go with either a double column or a scrollbox, or neither, but not both.
 * 23) **Yeah, I don't see the point in both, either. The double columns were put in by some guy named Yk. Havac 04:33, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) * "received facial wounds, but received medical treatment for both injuries" - repetitive. Please find a way to reword it in a way that you find satisfactory.
 * 25) **Changed up. Havac 04:33, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) *"Klivian later had a Death Star II kill silhouette painted on his fighter, suggesting that he was part of the attack run against the Death Star as well" - speculation. Just state the facts and let the readers draw their own conclusions.
 * 27) **I reworded it. Havac 22:57, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) ***It's better, but I'm not really sure about it. How do we know it was the Death Star II? Maybe it was a joke, or something. I wouldn't say the presence of a Death Star kill silhouette definitely attested to his participation, even if it is probable. Can't we just say "Klivian later had a Death Star II kill silhouette painted on his fighter" and leave it at that? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:02, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) * "Afterward, the Rogues captured Grand Moff Nivers at Tandankin." Is there really nothing more that could be said about that? It's understandable that you're trying not to get too detailed into the stuff which Hobbie isn't mentioned directly in, but I think a few sentences more info would be good.
 * 30) **It's about six pages, really, all of some guy getting shot down by an AT-AT and Wedge shooting up a pillar to take out their fighters. I've expanded just a little, but I really can't go beyond that. Havac 22:57, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Fair enough. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:02, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) * "They were taken into town" reads a little funny, like she's taking them for a night out or something. "the town" or somesuch might work better.
 * 33) **Changed. Havac 22:57, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) * "Approximately six months after the mission to Ciutric IV" - this should read with a date after Mindor, if available, since it's the last event covered.
 * 35) **Good stuff. I'm up to Endor, and I should get a significant amount more read later this evening/tomorrow. Up to Pirates and Pestage Defeating Zsinj, though I'll need to get back to the Mindor section.. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:14, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) Preliminary: There are quite a few redlinks.  Graestan ( Talk ) 19:48, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) *Redlinks are down within limits. Havac 18:54, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 39) * I don't think the extra sourcing is necessary on most of the points in the P&T. Maybe if you were making a contradicting statement or something, but not what you've got. Please remove.
 * 40) **All the double sourcing is because I'm either citing a trend, which requires at least two instances of it occurring, or (most of the time) I'm combining statements from two sources. Havac 22:31, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 41) ***Could you not cite the parts of the statements to their sources? Graestan ( Talk ) 22:33, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) ****I haven't done that for any other article, and I prefer not to get into "Klivian was cynical[3] and dour[2], as well as occasionally irritable in the morning,[5] much to the displeasure of his colleagues.[2]" For general statements, it's not always that easy to do, and for more specific statements, it ends up looking really messy and intrusive. I've never gone with mid-sentence citations, and I don't think there's a requirement to do so. Havac 00:15, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) * It's speculation to say that Klivian spoke to prostitutes "possibly as a result" of his romantic lack thereof, and certainly a stretch to say that his exchange with one on Corellia was "engaging" prostitutes.
 * 44) **Speculation-type language removed, and I didn't say he engaged a prostitute -- just that he was willing to engage them. Which we see -- she comes on to him, and he says, "I'm busy. Be around later?" Unless he's randomly lying to her and leading her on for no particular reason, he's willing to engage prostitutes. Havac 22:31, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) * Having just read the Darklighter comics, I believe it is imperative that at least in the BtS you describe Biggs' feelings concerning Hobbie in the comics, which are very far from friendly. It's one of those barely concealed loathings.
 * 46) **Expanded on. Havac 22:31, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) *That's all for now. Graestan ( Talk ) 20:09, 27 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just a suggestion: Couldn't you get some better images for the Darklighter section? At the moment, it's just various headshots of him, or him lying in bed...I think that panels of him actually doing something would illustrate the article much better. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * What's the deal with the Klivian surviving Hoth? I thought that the only source that addressed it was the NEGtC, but in that section you've sourced it to "Who's Who". Is that right? I only ask because Kesin Ommis doesn't source that pilot's survival to "Who's Who", instead it sort of infers that Ommis survives based on Klivian's survival in the NEGtC. What exactly does "Who's Who" say about Klivian in the BoH? Cull Tremayne 16:14, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Jamming in more NEGTC citations is all I really wanted to see. :P Cull Tremayne 01:17, 30 December 2008 (UTC)

Mohs

 * Nominated by: Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Pure Lando Calrissian Trilogy pyramid-power crack. Check your laws of physics at the door - you're in for a wild, wild ride.

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Had no trouble with this when it was up for GA. Cull Tremayne 09:52, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Just read this book for the first time.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:58, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Me too. Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The last section of the biography, and its corresponding part in the intro, stray really far from the subject. The focus should stay on Mohs, with the Lando/Vuffi plot only in there for context on his story. Related to that, it also seems to be written in Vuffi's and Lando's perpective; you have comments like "revealed to be a Sharu", and the part where Lando returns to the ship to find what Mohs has become. It should be kept in the perspective of Mohs, so you talk about him changing into the other form and waiting for Lando in the Falcon. - Lord Hydronium 03:26, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I think I've addressed this. Yrfeloran 07:56, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) In addition to Hydro's objection, the part where the perspective leapt out to me the most was when Mohs and Vaa "vanished" from Calrissian's sight. So, per Hydro. Thefourdotelipsis 09:19, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Specific objection addressed. Yrfeloran 07:56, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) From Xwing328:
 * 6) *Around the "Within the great pyramid" section: The previous sentence says they were transported into the pyramid. The next sentence says Mohs falls through the wall, and then Lando arrives. Could this method of transportation be clarified? Are they just falling through a wall or being beamed in?
 * 7) *Possibly a link to Mohs' mother.
 * 8) *You say the Falcon fled the system. This could use a touch of context, imo, but not too much to make the article focus more on Lando than Mohs. Were they running from something in particular, was the world being destroyed in its transformation, what? —Xwing328 (Talk) 01:54, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Toprawa:
 * 10) *A preliminary objection: I'm not a big fan of alternating between calling him a Sharu and a Toka between the infobox and the first sentence of the introduction, despite the pipelink. It's just confusing, and I would request choosing one or the other for uniformity. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * There's got to be some sort of award for "most consistently traitorous sidekick". Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Lando Calrissian

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:35, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: From the two directors that brought you Tales of the Jedi and Wraith Squadron! From the project behind Jaina Solo! From the minds behind Mara Jade Skywalker, an action-packed adventure filled with suspense, betrayal, romance, and, of course, inimitable charm. Now playing: The smoothest FAN ever to grace this page, Lando Calrissian!

(2 Inqs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) As co-nominator. Greyman ( Talk ) 20:45, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Objections will be fixed soon as sources are checked by several users, including myself.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:29, 22 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Imperialles 23:56, 24 January 2009 (UTC)

I dare object to Lando
 * 1) No info whatsoever from Lando Calrissian: Idiot's Array and Crisis on Cloud City. Not smooth. Thefourdotelipsis 03:04, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The latter has been addressed; I've asked Borsk about the former. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Former is also addressed now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ditto Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin. - Lord Hydronium 03:10, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I've went ahead and added a sentence or two of some background information for this objection. I looked over my copy of the source again and couldn't see anything new beyond the sentences I just added. Is there something specific you're thinking of that I could work in? Greyman ( Talk ) 13:51, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ** There's some other bits on pages 50, 76, and 88. - Lord Hydronium 08:27, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Information added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * The mentions of Ymile are rather confusingly arranged. There's a picture of her near where Lando wins the bet with Raynor, but no reference to her in the text, then much later in the article it mentions she helped Lando win. That second part should be noted and clarified at the time it actually occurs; also, she should be linked there, since she isn't at the moment. - Lord Hydronium 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Succession box should include Treece; Action Tidings and the Cloud City Databank entry both say he was the Administrator of Cloud City. - Lord Hydronium 00:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fixed the Ymile bits and buffed Lady Luck overall. Also, adjusted succession box, reffed from the actual Marvel comics though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:15, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Information missing on how Lando got back Cloud City, from The New Essential Guide to Characters. Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds not in; amongst the things to add is a bit in there about how Lando raised Tibanna profits that's also in the NEC. - Lord Hydronium 07:29, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **The Tibanna profits bit is already in there, just referenced from another source. The Cloud City re-taking has been added. Still working on GATOW. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Two tidbits from GATORW added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:41, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Added it to the "Sources" list as well. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) ***Oh, I see; I was searching for "percent". - Lord Hydronium 19:52, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * More NEGTC tidbits: Lando giving control of Cloud City to the Ugnaughts after Zorba cedes it. Lando refusing to go to Chewbacca's funeral out of guilt. From GG3: Lobot convinced Lando to help Leia and the group. - Lord Hydronium 07:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **All of the above fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *More missing sources: Rebellion Era Sourcebook, Roleplaying Game Revised Core Rulebook, Roleplaying Game: Saga Edition Core Rulebook, Dark Empire Sourcebook, The Truce at Bakura Sourcebook, Han Solo and the Corporate Sector Sourcebook (I just spotted a small mention, but there could be more), Heir to the Empire Sourcebook, The Last Command Sourcebook, and Star Wars Trilogy Sourcebook - Special Edition. For now. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Rebellion Era Sourcebook is listed now, but it needs information from it. There's some on Page 111, for a start. - Lord Hydronium 07:01, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***The info on that page was already in the article. Could you tell me what specifically you are referring to? And the rest of the sourcebooks have been checked and added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:18, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) * for The Truce at Bakura, but it contains unique information to add. - Lord Hydronium 23:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) *In addition to the above, the following appearances and mentions are missing: Out of the Closet: The Assassin's Tale, Darksaber, Force Heretic I: Remnant, Therefore I Am: The Tale of IG-88, Payback: The Tale of Dengar, The Last One Standing: The Tale of Boba Fett, X-wing: Rogue Squadron, X-wing: Wedge's Gamble, X-wing: Wraith Squadron, Young Jedi Knights: Heirs of the Force, Young Jedi Knights: The Lost Ones, Young Jedi Knights: Lightsabers, Young Jedi Knights: Darkest Knight, Young Jedi Knights: Shards of Alderaan, Young Jedi Knights: Jedi Bounty, and Young Jedi Knights: The Emperor's Plague. - Lord Hydronium 01:17, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **Chack and I have addressed these. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Almost forgot: None of the movie novelizations or radio dramas are included. - Lord Hydronium 01:19, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) **This particular objection has been addressed, along with adding a number of other ESB and ROTJ-related appearances. I've checked both novelizations and will check with Tope to make sure there's no new info in the radio dramas. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:19, 1 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) **Han will have these objections down! We've gotta give them more time! (In all seriousness, we are working on these). Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:40, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) *Sorry, haven't checked those yet, but another: Galaxywide NewsNets from Adventure Journal 14. "Calrissian Resurfaces as Baron Administrator". - Lord Hydronium 06:36, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) **Mined. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:45, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) Gah, redlinks in source list, mine Databank and Wizards. Those first two totally slipped me mind.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) *Red links busted. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:56, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) *Databank has been mined and source list updated. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:32, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) Infobox not fully/correctly sourced.  Graestan ( Talk ) 04:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) *I think I got the missing reference. If you desire other sourcing, please let me know. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:22, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) **Got it on the second try. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) I'd like to take Yrf's comment below and turn it into an actual objection; for instance, I know there are quotes to be had by or about Lando and/or what he was up to at the time for the LCA, TTT, and BFC. Ideally, since the sections are so long, each should probably have a quote.  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:48, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) *All sections now have quotes except three tiny sections in the "Non-canon appearances" section in the BtS since quotes do not exist for those parts. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:32, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) **Hope you found at least one funny one from LCA. ;) Graestan ( Talk ) 23:12, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Lando91.jpg, Image:LanLukVil.jpg, Image:Weaklando.jpg, Image:Lando&Luke Marvel71.jpg and Image:Lando&Han captive.jpg could all do with a re-scan. Other than that, excellent work, and about time! :) --Imperialles 13:08, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *All done. I was bored and Ataru mentioned it at the right time. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:16, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Image placement is irrelevant to the text in a number of locations. SinisterSamurai 07:32, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *I've moved a few things around. As it stands, there are two images that aren't directly pertinent to the sections they are in: the Caamas Document crisis section, and in the Kessel investment sections, where we used generic Lando images to fill gaps that would have left lots of text with no complimentary images. As it is, there's a good balance of images to compliment the text, but by removing those, the article's appearance would suffer accordingly. And there is article precedent for using generic images to fill "gaps". If there were more relevant images that could be substituted in, just point me in their direction and I'll gladly change it, but for now, it should stay as it is. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:03, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Looks good.
 * 5) Needs info from Star Wars: Power of the Jedi. Thefourdotelipsis 08:54, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:55, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Eyrezer
 * 8) * The Young Calrissian comic is listed in the Non-canon section of the appearances, but is in the main body without any special tags. It should be consistent one way or the other. If, as it looks like, the story is mentioned in the CSWE, then I suggest it gets moved out of the non-canon section of the appearances. I also suggest that the reference to YC have a note added along the lines of: "This story was canonized by inclusion in the Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia." His ship from this story could also get a mention in the Ships section later on. --Eyrezer 11:00, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *It doesn't seem to be mentioned in CSWE, according to Chack. I've added in non-canon tags in the main body, will get to the ships section soon. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:50, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) **Correction. Our page seems to list the comic as canon, so I'll check and see if I can find where it was canonized. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:53, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Purpilia added CSWE as a source on the Meek page, which is what I was going by. Probably not mentioned in Lando's article itself, though. --Eyrezer 09:24, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ****Yeah, I've fixed just about all the objection, need to add the ships section, though. ships section added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:28, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *****Great. With the Meek story, doesn't the CSWE say it was reported by HNN sources? This should be added, in a way that reflects the potential ambiguity or unreliability of the account that seems to be suggested in the Encyclopedia entry. --Eyrezer 14:03, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) ******That's exactly what CSWE reports. I've updated the article to reflect that. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:36, 10 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not a formal objection, but there's space for a lot more quotes in the article. Yrfeloran 04:13, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Who portrayed Lando in Dark Forces: Soldier for the Empire audio drama? Mauser 13:48, 1 February 2009 (UTC)

Bakura Incident

 * Nomination by: - Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first major project here and a significant Expanded Universe event. I managed to correct most of the errors so it is up to you now to decide. Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

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Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * The intro could do a better job of setting the stage for the Battle of Bakura. How did the Rebels get there? How did the battle start? Etc. By and large, this needs to be about doubled in length
 * 3) * Redlinks in infobox.
 * 4) * You'll need a link to the conquest of G'rho
 * 5) * Who is "The Admiral" mentioned in 3rd paragraph of Background? Please provide context.
 * 6) *You'll need to explain the advantages of enteching humans a little more clearly please for the sake of the reader, as well as Sibwarra's role therein.
 * 7) * Is Shreeftut or whatever a title or person? There should be consistent capitalization depending on which one it is.
 * 8) * Please limit the use of parentheses in articles.
 * 9) * Per Toprawa in that a lot of the article goes beyond the scope of its topic. Some topics I would recommend shortening:
 * 10) **The Imperial takeover of Bakura could easily be reduced to a single paragraph.
 * 11) **The interception of the message droid by the Rebels could also be shortened.
 * 12) **The Truce section could also be shortened some&mdash;it gets into a lot of play-by-play.
 * 13) **You don't need drastic cuts, IMHO, just some trimming and condensing here and there. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:01, 4 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *Correct these and I will continue my review. I would also caution you to beware of POV. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) Toprawa:
 * 16) *I didn't think I'd ever say this, but this article is way too detailed. This isn't so much an article on the battle as it's a summary of the novel itself. I would strongly recommend going through and strictly condensing the narration into details about actual conflict. A good prelude summary is always essential for a battle article, but be careful of going off on extraneous tangents from the battle itself. As a way of keeping the article focused, try sectioning it into three major sections, "Prelude," "The battle," and "Aftermath," and subsection from there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:38, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *I just finished re-reading through TaB last night, and after perusing the TaB Sourcebook this morning, while it may be a bit radical, this article, as it is written right now, should really be under the title "Bakura Incident," to encompass the entire proceedings, and a separate, much shorter, less-comprehensive article should be devoted to the final battle taking place in the book. Really, that final battle should be under the title "Third Battle of Bakura" and the battle taking place at the beginning of the book should be under "Second Battle." Moreover, our article Bakura Truce, I believe, should simply be a redirect to a "Bakura Incident" article. If you're willing, Andy, I would recommend just reworking the introduction a little bit, and perhaps any other necessary parts of the article, to reflect the greater Incident, and try to nominate that. It would certainly take less work on your part. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:00, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Andy, I personally agree with Toprawa. The Bakura Incident includes so many angles, the Rebel Alliance, the Ssi-ruuvi Imperium and the Galactic Empire. All three have their own agenda and there is much chaos that ensues. Great work has been done in writing the article, but I think it could be moved and reworked a touch to encompass all three angles, as well. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:39, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) ***I am currently reworking this article to meet its new title: Bakura Incident. I'll be adding information from a number of sources over the next few days/weeks/whatever as I go, and will apprise you when expansions are complete. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:05, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) References needed in the infobox for:
 * 21) *Strength -> Orbital Repair Platform
 * 22) *Casualties -> 60+ TIE/ln starfighters
 * 23) *Casualties -> Half of the garrison defected to the Alliance, dead or missing —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:31, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) **Objection outdated due to infobox swap. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:05, 28 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not bad for a first shot, but this will need some work. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I managed to correct bullet points 1, 2, 3, 4 and 6 to my best abilities though I will need help with points five and seven. I haven't be able to do that much work on Wookieepedia because I am preoccupied with other things in Malaysia though I found some really good, cheap Star Wars books and comics that I like. Andykatib 05:45, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Attention all: Ataru has indicated that he is interested in taking over this nomination.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:08, 27 January 2009 (UTC)

Vote to remove nom (Inquisitorius only)
 * 1) This article has not been touched by Andykatib in over a month, and he is editing other articles here, so it seems he's given up on this one.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:47, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Indeed. The oldest objections seem to be 2 months old today, and no effort has been made to address the other objections, which are quite hefty, in any way. The nominator's contribs would seem to indicate he has moved on. Toprawa and Ralltiir 16:21, 26 January 2009 (UTC)

Missile Boat

 * Nominated by: MIS Tau 1 22:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I've merged/deleted/restored this article similar to it's FA status

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Support
 * 1) Looks to be back where it was. Thefourdotelipsis 04:52, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Back to where it was when it was first reviewed. Cull Tremayne 10:16, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:41, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A paragraph in History is unsourced. Also, wasn't Thrawn an admiral when the missile boat was developed? If so, you should refer to him as "Admiral Thrawn" in the intro.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:53, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 3) *The infobox isn't fully sourced.
 * 4) *Fourth paragraph of history isn't sourced.
 * 5) *"The abundance of missiles led to the development of previously unorthodox tactics, much to the chagrin of Imperial commanders, as advanced missiles were relatively expensive." Can you check that? I don't recall the game mentioning Imperial commanders having issues with its use.
 * 6) *"It was at this time that Thrawn revealed his new starfighter, the Missile Boat, to the Emperor." This too. Can't find a specific reference of when he first informed Palpy about it.
 * 7) *The hull's RU rating could be mentioned under shields and armor.
 * 8) *"Despite all efforts by Missile Boat pilots, the Empire was forced to evacuate the research platforms." V1 & V2 should probably be split into two articles, both of which should be linked in here.
 * 9) *"Missile Boats were responsible on more than one occasion for protecting convoys carrying other Missile Boats from Zaarin's raiders." Only one that I can find since the other was a decoy.
 * 10) *According to the game, Zaarin's destruction of the few Missile Boat manufacturing facilities also contributed to their withdrawal from service.
 * 11) *Maarek Stele should probably be mentioned a little earlier than he is, since he was involved in most of this. A little context for him might be useful too.
 * 12) *The BTS could be expanded a little. For example, the usual stuff about its first appearance and that it was limited to multiplayer in XWA.
 * 13) *There's no mention of the training missions. If not a training section, then they should at least be mentioned under history as they appear to be simulations of some of the ship's early uses. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:43, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Image:Mis2zn2.gif needs work, and I don't think Image:MissileBoat-TFDOTEOSS.jpg is actually a book cover. I'm assuming simply fair use? —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:09, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Image:MissileBoat-TFDOTEOSS.jpg is from the back cover of the guide it's sourced to. Bookcover is used on that kind of excerpted image all over the place. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:28, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) *Also, since Image:Mis2zn2.gif was intended to highlight the DOS version of the game, which tops out at 256 colors, the only work it needed was to be converted from the deprecated GIF format, which is now done. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:56, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **DOS? Wow. I haven't used that in a while. Thanks Culator. —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:41, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

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IG-88A

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Finally, it's done. The walking, canon defying droid!

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Support
 * 1) Killer. Cull Tremayne 19:57, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Excellent. Quite polished. Thefourdotelipsis 23:39, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:50, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Stuff
 * 2) * How sure are we that the picture being used is IG-88A? Isn't it more likely that it's IG-88B?
 * 3) **Added another image.
 * 4) ***Nice.
 * 5) * Can we get more detail on his reactivation? I'm thinking specifically in regards to his appearance in Star Wars 85: The Hero. How did he fail to capture Lando? What was his role there?
 * 6) **Added some info. I'm pretty sure that's all IG-88A did in that comic.
 * 7) *** Hate to object further, but it's missing a few key points as to how the comic concluded and IG-88A's role in it. Specifically, I'm thinking of the death of this guy, and some more details as to how Drebble failed to bring Lando back to his homeworld. Cull Tremayne 16:04, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Expanded it a bit more. I don't want to stray too far from IG-88A.
 * 9) *****Much better.
 * 10) * In addition, is that really all we know about his role in YJK? You were able to get three whole sections just from the short story "I Think Therefore I Am". Surely more can be mined from three books than a paragraph and a half.
 * 11) **It's been expanded, but IG-88A is really a background character in the stories. He has a pretty minor role, and in Delusions of Grandeur he's only present for like one page.
 * 12) ***Fair enough.
 * 13) * Beef up the BtS please. Explain how TNEGtC explained that it was IG-88A in Marvel. Explain why it needs to be IG-88A in Forces of Corruption and not IG-88B. (He is able to infect the Death Star, etc.) Explain his weird appearance in Kenix Kil: The Bounty Hunters and why it needs to be IG-88A. I don't think it's specified that it's IG-88A in that story, there's only a pic of him.
 * 14) **BTS greatly expanded. Let me know if something still needs improvement.
 * 15) * Gotta question some of the sources and appearances there. Why do we assume that it's IG-88A in Lego Star Wars, or the Complete Visual Dictionary? Is he specifically mentioned as such? Unless IG-88A is mentioned specifically, it probably shouldn't be listed should it?
 * 16) **Corrected.
 * 17) * Sorta in conjunction with the previous objection. Should we be using Image:IG-88 equipment.jpg? It's essentially the same image as Image:IG88B.jpg, meant to represent IG-88B. So is this pic actually of IG-88A specifically?
 * 18) **Replaced.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:50, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) *Other than that, nice to see Count Droidfish's balonium wiped away. Nice job. Cull Tremayne 00:12, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) I think the Equipment and abilities section should be proseified and expanded. I'd expect it to be quite large given the amount of info I think we know. I think the P&T could be expanded a fair bit too; it should talk about his self-confidence or whatever you'd call it, his ambition, etc. The BtS could also be expanded a bit with his history and the original stuff from WEG/EGtC and the differences with it and Tales. (I know I said that wouldn't be necessary but on second thought I think it is). -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:29, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *I still think a mention of the fact that his - or, at the time, "IG-88"'s - backstory originated from WEG (namely, Galaxy Guide 3), until Anderson adapted and expanded it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:07, 1 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) **Fixed now, I think.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:52, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Looks good. I'd like to see the WEG stuff pushed up a little in the BtS, ideally before Therefore I Am is mentioned. You could go from talking about ESB to mentioning WEG creating the backstory, and then go on to Therefore I Am, and then go into the details about WEG, or something like that. That's my suggestion, anyway. :) Overall the BtS looks a little unwieldly...it could possibly be reorganized a tad, but I'll have a proper look tomorrow or Friday and get back to you on that with more specifics. The stuff about IG-88D and SotE doesn't seem very relevant, though - I'd suggest axing it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:20, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) I think the BTS needs to be structured more appropriately for the character's OOU history; he wasn't really created for ESB if that character turned out not to even be him. Don't feel you have to do the standard linear "He was created for X, used in Y, etc." format if it doesn't really fit for the character. - Lord Hydronium 06:23, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:52, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) Xwing328's short list:
 * 27) * Is IG-88A equipped with regular blasters or blaster cannons? Infobox says one, "Equipment and abilities" says another.
 * 28) **Fixed.
 * 29) * Redlink in the infobox. —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:01, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) **Fixed. Thanks for the read.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:51, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) Toprawa:
 * 32) *Have you checked SWE and CSWE for information/inclusion into the Source list? Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:25, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * After reading IG-72, why not read this one?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the reviews, everyone.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:51, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Dur Gejjen

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 08:11, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: This article was almost comically short before.

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Support
 * 1)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 01:59, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Headshot! Boom!  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:55, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Jaina Solo:
 * 2) * There's no mention of his young family.
 * 3) **There isn't any real info on his family. Just that he's Nov Gejjen's son.
 * 4) * "Little did Gejjen know, the Galactic Alliance, Gejjen's enemies, had acquired proof that Gejjen was behind the assassination attempt on an Alliance ally, Tenel Ka."--How did they acquire the proof?
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * "Solo formulated a plan: Galactic Alliance Chief of State Cal Omas would meet Gejjen on the Deep Core planet of Vulpter. Omas would come under the guise of peace, calling for an end to the ever-escalating conflict between the Galactic Alliance and the Confederation forces."--This needs to be cleared up a little. If I recall, Jacen didn't plan the meeting between Omas and Gejjen. How did he know that Gejjen was meeting with Omas on Vulpter? -- Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 00:30, 22 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:41, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) Some concerns have been listed on his talk page by an anon. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:50, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *They have been addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 02:28, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Chack Attack:
 * 11) * Your quote says that Antilles resigned, but twice in the article you say that Gejjen fired him. Which is it?
 * 12) *It's weird. He fire him, but Wedge basically said "You can't fire me, because I quit!"
 * 13) **I'd like to see it clarified a bit in the article. Something to the effect of: "Though Gejjen tried to fire Antilles, the general resigned instead" would be good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:45, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * "set up the coup on the life of Sal-Solo." This should be rewritten to make it smoother.
 * 15) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:48, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Otherwise, it's very good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:35, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 18) *It'd be nice if some reasoning for his assassination attempt on Antilles was succinctly explained in the intro.
 * 19) *"asking Gejjen to keep contact to a minimum, and to feed information of Sal-Solo's location for the time being." This doesn't make sense and/or is awkwardly wording. How are they supposed to get Sal-Solo's location with minimal contact?
 * 20) *"The plan was carried out and Sal-Solo was killed, with Fett teaming up with his granddaughter Mirta Gev and Han Solo." This last clause doesn't really fit well here.
 * 21) *"Angered by Antilles' failure, he demoted Antilles from his position as Five Worlds military commander," Unclear antecedent.
 * 22) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:25, 26 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Sev'rance Tann

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:35, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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Support
 * 1) What, no support yet? Seems OK to me Enochf 20:10, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Approved by the Desk.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:49, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 18:43, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:02, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * Seems to me that there should be some more battle links in the intro. Tann stole the Decimators. Another possible link for her death on Krant, no?
 * 3) **Linked Battle of Krant, every other battle is already linked.
 * 4) * The link between Sarapin and plunging the Core into darkness is not contextified in the intro.
 * 5) **To be honest I don't think it really needs to be - this happened and this happened as a result of it, and the specifics of why aren't particularly important at this point - but I've added in a small mention of the geothermal generators.
 * 6) ***That's all I was looking for. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:49, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * "Although very successful," A bit POVish. (intro).
 * 8) **Reworked a tad.
 * 9) * "Welcome to the Sarapin System, Sev'Rane. You now stand before one of the most heavily guarded planets in the Galaxy" Is the typo in her name in the game?
 * 10) **Nope, Enochf fixed it.
 * 11) * Second paragraph of "Into the Core Worlds" could use some variety with diction. Particularly since we're talking about "power relays", the word "powerful" just seems . . . off. I dunno, could just be me.
 * 12) **Varied it up a bit. Let me know if you want more.
 * 13) * Contextify Jabba on first mention.
 * 14) **I figured "a rival of Boorka" covered it.
 * 15) * "k, they are not referring to in the game itself, so presumably others were unaware of her origins" Wording is a bit off here.
 * 16) **I made a small change which should fix it; let me know if it's still not doing.
 * 17) *All small objections overall&mdash;good work, Acky. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:45, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thank you very much, and sorry for the delay in addressing these objections. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:56, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Blah
 * 20) * In the Battles on Sarapin section: "Additionally, lava blowholes dotted the area, with magma containing deep within fissures spitting out frequently, destroying anything that was standing over the blowhole." Needs a reword. Is this supposed to be, "with magma contained deep within fissures that spewed lava frequently"? Or something similar?
 * 21) **Yep. I've reworded for clarity; let me know if it's still not working.
 * 22) * Under the P&T, end of second section: "she killed one of the wild creatures she had been told to tame despite him having done nothing wrong, in order to engender obedience among his comrades." The length of this sentence is a bit unwieldy, mind splitting it up?
 * 23) **Broken up.
 * 24) * Last sentence of P&T: "Ultimately, Tann was more at home as the general than the Dark Acolyte; none were able to outfox her tactically during the month she lasted of the Clone Wars, but she was defeated in lightsaber combat." Why the general and the Dark Acolyte? Should that be "as a general" and "than a Dark Acolyte"? Only because "the Dark Acolyte" reads weird, since there were plenty of them. Additionally, "during the month she lasted of the Clone Wars". Is "of the Clone Wars" the best way to say that? This whole sentence could use a reword. Cull Tremayne 08:14, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) **Reworded a tad, let me know what you think. Thanks for the review, and sorry for the delay in addressing your objections. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:56, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Nice work on the images there :) Yrfeloran 06:50, 25 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I notice that you mention that Tann lead from the front several times, with the source linking to the game. Can we be sure that this isn't just game mechanics, or the gamer's choice? You don't have to bring Tann along on all these attacks do you? In fact, can't you just load her into a shuttle or something and bring her along? If its possible to play the game without her leading from the front, should those mentions remain? Cull Tremayne 08:14, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * That's true. However, in the two cases where it's mentioned - at Geonosis, and on Sarapin's surface - the cutscenes somehwat negate the ability to load her on a shuttle. But, looking back over it, it's not a certainty, because she could have just walked up after her soldiers had cleared the area. So, I've cut the mention of it in the Tatooine section and reworded the mentions of it in relation to Sarapin - for that, we do know she slew Jor Drakas with her lightsaber during the battle. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:56, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Is there any info to necessitate a "Powers and abilities" section, as she is a Dark Jedi? —Xwing328 (Talk) 06:36, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I wouldn't say so. I'm not a big fan of having P&As for the sake of P&As when powers aren't really shown. All I could really say is that she wielded a lightsaber and was "trained in the dark side by Dooku," since we don't see her use the Force at all, but both of those are already covered in the P&T. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:56, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

T1-LB

 * Nominated by: Ajeanette 6 January 2009

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Object
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "T1-LB, nicknamed "Elbee" by Jedi Padawan Zayne Carrick, was a one of the LB-series bulk-loading droids in service for the Jedi Academy on the planet Taris." Could you add a date for this?
 * 3) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 4) * "However, Zayne Carrick survived the attack." Presumably, he was targeted then. This needs a bit more context.
 * 5) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 6) * "until his latest function for the Jedi Tower and Academy located on the planet Taris" Bad wording. Also, what was this function?
 * 7) *Addressed. I also mentioned the function earlier in the same paragraph. Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 8) * "At the time of the vision each of their Padawans wore a red suit while navigating by the Force to the camp leading the Masters to conclude that one of their own Padawans would bring about the return of the Sith and endanger the galaxy." Run on sentence here.
 * 9) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 10) * "go between" A little too colloquial.
 * 11) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 12) * "decided that they would strike down their Padawans in response to the vision when he discovered that T1-LB had witnessed the entire scene." This is confusing. T1 witnessed the vision?
 * 13) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 14) * "one of the Padawans, who had escaped his Masters after they killed his four classmates and attempted to do the same to him" This wording could be a little better.
 * 15) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 16) * "Last Resort departed for the war front where Mandalorians and Republic forces were bogged down, but as supplies began to run low the fugitives raided a mining colony on the planet Vanquo" This is also a bit of a run on sentence, and should be rewritten.
 * 17) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 18) * "but in order for T1-LB to perform any command his companions often had to employ reverse psychology or references to Lucien Draay" This would go better in P&T, which I see you already have. Perhaps expand on that a bit.
 * 19) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 20) * "Then Camper directed the starship towards Jarael's location" Awkward wording.
 * 21) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 22) * When Jarael reached the droid" Can you rephrase this?
 * 23) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 24) *That's it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:10, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Telos IV

 * Nominated by: Cylka  -talk- 23:31, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nom. On advice from Graestan...

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Support
 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:34, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice job. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 23:18, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Object &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:22, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) A couple of noodles from the Pasta Bowl:
 * 2) * "Telos once possessed an enormous planet-wide polar irrigation system, one that rivaled Coruscant's own." Seems POV-ish. I do not recall anything in TSL that says it rivaled Coruscant.
 * 3) **Bao-Dur does comment on it being "like the one on Coruscant". The sentence has been so amended.
 * 4) ***Fair enough, but "very" was removed, as that is PoV-ish.
 * 5) * I believe, although I could be incorrect, but the history section needs GameLS and Endgame for the portions pertaining to the Exile's mission on Telos.
 * 6) **The template(s) have been added.
 * 7) * "The search for the ship led the Exile's group to an old military base&hellip;" Is there an article on the military base? I believe a link is needed, but I cannot seem to find the article.
 * 8) **There is an article. Link has been inserted.
 * 9) * When mentioning the arrival of Carth Onasi, I think it might be beneficial to mention there that he was a Telosian. It serves as a plot point for his motivation in the game.
 * 10) **Added.
 * 11) *Otherwise, nice article, Cylka.
 * 12) **Objections addressed.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 01:30, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Karazak Slaver's Cooperative

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 19:17, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nomination. Correct the article wherever is needed, please. Correct me wherever I need.

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Support
 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:24, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Hi Skippy. Could you expand the introduction of the article a bit more. Could you also add a couple of sentences to the Behind the scenes about when the KSC first appeared in canon, and later developments, etc. Also, could you remove the references in the intro paragraph, and, while keeping the various names in the intro, also place that information in the main body of the article as well. --Eyrezer 14:10, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done, done and done. Only the first sources and appearances are listed in BtS; I don't want to re-tell the list of sources and appearances in prose.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:16, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Cav's squadron briefing:
 * 4) * Acquisitions specialists were also used to define the potential value and risk of a specific person or small group, if a contract for them was possible. Not sure what you mean here - are they used to scout out potential targets already identified, or to find them and offer them for sale?
 * 5) **Canonically, only after a request. Changed.
 * 6) *The developer, maximum responsible of the operation, was to coordinate the plans with strike team leaders, and to give the final "go". Sometimes, the executive leadership of the Cooperative could differ the developer's judgement. These sentences appear to be missing a few words, or use the wrong ones in some places. Please revise to give some clarity.
 * 7) **Reworded it; I hope it's clearer now.
 * 8) ***I changed something to make it a little clearer - can you check that it is correct?
 * 9) ****Looks like what I understand reading the OS. I mean: Yes, it's correct.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:01, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Any information of what the Slavers did with the subjects they bought off Thulaka?
 * 11) **No idea. The KSC might sell them or eat them for what I know. No changes to the article.
 * 12) ***Fair enough.
 * 13) * At least three teams - three teams of who or what?
 * 14) **Changed: Strike teams, as defined in the same article.
 * 15) * Check your source ref tags - the should come after punctuation, not before. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 19:12, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) **Done except twice: Before a hyphen and before a closed parenthesis; in both cases I thought it would have been ambiguous otherwise. Tell me to change it and I will.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:30, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) ***Generally, I would avoid using parenthesis altogether in an article, and have removed two and replaced them with &mdash; instead. I would look to remove any and work them into the article body as sentences. I think using a ref tag before a hyphen is the standard; I'm sure I've used it myself. Nice work, Farl - told you that you could produce a FAN :) Just check the unstruck objection for me, and I'll support it. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 19:18, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 19) * Does the source capitalize Cooperative when it's stated by itself? My initial inkling is that it should be decapitalized, but I'd like to know what the source says.
 * 20) **Sources tend to say "KSC" or "the Karazaks." I think acronyms are best avoided in an encyclopedia, and the article deals with other things named Karazak; so I tried to choose a third way.
 * 21) * Some short paragraphs really could use combining.
 * 22) **Please specify which ones. Unfortunately, I don't see anything telling me "Please, join me with the previous paragraph."
 * 23) ***I merged two paragraphs, but in retrospect, they're pretty well delineated. Objection struck. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:24, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) * "Due to these policies, the Karazaks were notorious, and at the same time the slavers would strive for perfection" Vague and confusing wording.
 * 25) **Reworded.
 * 26) * "pressure the ambassador" Which ambassador?
 * 27) **Reworded.
 * 28) * "bought exotic prey to" Either "bought" or "to" doesn't seem to fit.
 * 29) **Reworded. "Buy from".
 * 30) * "although their operations were amateurishly botched" POV/'poor wording.
 * 31) **Reworded.
 * 32) * Eliminate double-linking in Members section. Link once per intro, per main body, per infobox, and possibly in an image caption or succession box.
 * 33) **Done.
 * 34) *Not bad for a first run; as a suggestion, try to read your article aloud before you submit it&mdash;that'll help with some with the clumsy wording that pops up every now and again. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:50, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) **I'll keep it in mind, thank you. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:01, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Lancer Brunou

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:01, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: DarkStryder is back. Beware.

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 17:27, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:28, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) LOST? Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:27, 2 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Can something not be worked into the article explaining, per the BTS, that he eventually jumped ship to return to Sarne?
 * 3) **I'm not entirely sure it can be. Brunou has no fixed fate in the adventure, leaving it to the whim of the gamemaster and players. He's not mentioned again in the series, and adding a possible fate when there is a choice of two seems to close to speculation.
 * 4) ***My concern and interpretation of this is that the article asserts he survives as long as until the artifact is chucked out into space. Is there more adventure content that can happen after this point in which he can still die/not die? I'm taking this to mean that even though he can die at any point, the article asserts he lives and thus I would think that he would live long enough to join the FarStar and abandon ship, if you understand what I'm saying. Is this incorrect? Toprawa and Ralltiir 16:44, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****I understand the confusion. The point at which Brunou can die is during the confrontation with the FarStar crew to gain possession of the Plaque; the adventure asserts that Brunou survives long enough for the crew to figure out what is going on and attempt to take the Plaque from him. The outcome is up to the Gamemaster; if he is allowed to survive, he joins the crew until he can jump ship at the first opportunity. That's why I have the confrontation worded vaguely as "Managing to get it away from Brunou—who had become defensive of his prize—the crew sent the artifact into space" with no explanation of the incident. Beyond this point, there is no further story to that particular adventure, and no future mention of him. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 11:09, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *****In that case, I would recommend specifying in the BTS exactly at what point in the adventure he can die. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:27, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * Not an objection, but I made a minor change in wording here, and I just want to make sure I haven't changed the meaning here at all: "and he ordered Jelok to abandon the secondary base camp after he reported Tansad missing and that two technicians with him were shot by sniper fire from the jungle." Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:19, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **Seems fine to me. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 15:12, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Some things:
 * 10) * You refer to the enemies as both hostiles, and "hostiles". Please standardize it.
 * 11) **Standardized to hostiles without the quotation marks.
 * 12) * Also, are there any more details on what/who exactly the hostiles are? Are they the missing troopers?
 * 13) **That's my reading of it, implied by the fact that the Plaque of Victory increases hostile feelings and turns people against each other, and that the troops who went out in search of the hostiles turn up dead in the exact spot that the remaining troopers fired at. However, it's never spelt out specifically in the article. Add this to the fact that there is an adventure hook that shows that the Aaris species are not entirely extinct, makes it a little unclear, so I erred on the side of caution on this one by not pinning it down. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 15:12, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *Good job, Cav.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:17, 28 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Horton Salm

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:19, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Shock horror! Non-DarkStryder nom goodness!

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Support
 * 1) "Gray Leader, standing by."  Graestan ( Talk ) 17:18, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grunny  (Talk) 06:36, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:20, 5 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 2) * Cav. Cav. Cav, Cav, Cav. You don't mention Y-wings in the intro whatsoever.
 * 3) **Grae. Grae, Grae, Grae, Grae. I do now.
 * 4) * It should be mentioned in the bio that Gray Squadron and Aggressor Wing flew S3s, and that Defender wing flew A4s (source for the A4s being Wedge's Gamble).
 * 5) **Mentions included.
 * 6) * Jake Farrell also flew on the Death Star run.
 * 7) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 8) * A mention of Commando Team One in the Brentaal section would be more than appropriate.
 * 9) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 10) * Second paragraph of "Initial raid" is a bit unwieldy.
 * 11) **Split into two paragraphs.
 * 12) * "Training commander" is an incredibly long section with one monster of a paragraph at the beginning. Please restructure.
 * 13) **Broken up, split into sections.
 * 14) * Same with the second paragraph of "The First Battle of Borleias."
 * 15) **Broken up into two paragraphs.
 * 16) *More later. Graestan ( Talk ) 06:02, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **I am awash with anticipation :P - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:28, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * Context for the Redemption scenario.
 * 19) **Added.
 * 20) * Context for Home One.</s.
 * 21) **Added.
 * 22) * You should mention that the pilots were kept in the dark as to Boreleias's location if you're to later mention that Horn found the location through Whistler's data.
 * 23) **Added.
 * 24) * Context for the Katana fleet.
 * 25) **Added. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 10:52, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) *That's all. Graestan ( Talk ) 03:56, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) Okay, I had to come back with one more. No Fact File information? If so, any you want to share? ^_^  Graestan ( Talk ) 05:48, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) *Struck before I added, eh? Trusting of you :) Found and added in any case. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:03, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 30) * " As the evacuation transports were cleared for vertical" Vague wording. What does "vertical" mean?
 * 31) **Reworded/ clarified.
 * 32) * Please link to starfighter combat somewhere in there.
 * 33) **Done.
 * 34) * "alm was surprised by this turn of events, and angry when he learned that General Airen Cracken, head of New Republic Intelligence, had known that Celchu was innocent all along, and was indignant that his fellow officer had allowed him to berate, suspect, and treat Celchu with disdain, all the while knowing the truth." Bit of a run-on here.
 * 35) **Broken up.
 * 36) * "However, as Decipher identified him as Horton Salm, this is now incorrect." Sentence is not self-sourcing.
 * 37) **Reworded, added info from CSWE.
 * 38) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:42, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Several of the internal links to the Battle of Brentaal IV article don't quite match up yet - they will do when I post my rewrite of that article in the next day or two. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:19, 16 January 2009 (UTC)

Battle of Brentaal IV (Galactic Civil War)

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:18, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Complimenting Horton Salm above, and Dar Keyis over on the GAN page.

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:05, 27 January 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Why did Fel want to find his wife? Some context on this would be helpful. Otherwise, nice work, though beware of British spellings.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:20, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added some context. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:23, 27 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Mission to Prakith

 * Nomination by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:26, 21 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: And so it is with this one as it has been with those that came before&hellip;minus the flowers ;)

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Support
 * 1) Darth Acheron123
 * 06:48, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments

Visas Marr

 * Nomination by: Cylka  -talk- 01:04, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It appears that one can never move too quickly.

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Support
 * 1) Good stuff, Cylka.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 02:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Sure, sure, win Round One, get a head start on Round 2 :P NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 03:20, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Why do I get the sense WP:KOTOR is gearing up for a WP:TOTJ-like run?  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:17, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Good as far as I'm concerned.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:38, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 23:57, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Once again, great work on this one! 05:04, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Kid Sister, Kid Sister, wherever I go, you're gonna go! Kid Sister, Kid Sister&hellip; Kid Sister and Me! ®  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:32, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Objections addressed in IRC session. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:31, 7 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "The Sith Lord Darth Nihilus, one of the leaders of the Sith Triumvirate, brought devastation to the world as well as the Jedi Order, killing all organic life, yet leaving Marr alive, albeit with damaged vision." Split this, and talk about the destruction of the Order more.
 * 3) **Split and elaborated.
 * 4) * Clarify that Nihilus is this foe when first mentioning him in the body.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * "Marr's first genuine encounter with the Exile left her disquieted. It had been some time since someone was concerned more for her well being than her physical state. She felt that the mercy the Exile showed not only towards her, but others as well, would serve as a weapon for her enemies. Nevertheless, impressed by the Exile's skills, Marr rediscovered hope and came to consider that perhaps the universe was not as her master had showed her, and that maybe with her help the Exile might be able to stop him. She found solace in the knowledge that her master did not understand nor see the Exile. But she cautioned that the Exile needed to understand why this was if she was to have a chance at defeating Nihilus. She refused to guide the Exile to him untested and without her potential realized, as she felt the Jedi was not yet ready to face such a threat and feared to lose her only hope. She foresaw that they would meet in the near future, however." This just seems a bit too flowery, and that it could be simplified a bit (moreso the second part of my objection).
 * 7) **It's been cut down a bit and simplified.
 * 8) * "Marr felt compelled to behold what lay beneath Nihilus's death mask in order to sever the last remaining bond between them." What was beneath it? "A man, nothing more" right?
 * 9) **Added that in.
 * 10) * At one point you pipelink Darth Traya to Kreia. I'd explain a liitle that Kreia was Traya.
 * 11) **Explanation added.
 * 12) * Intro exclusive info, when you say that she would help rebuild the Jedi Order.
 * 13) **It's in there now.
 * 14) * Context on Mira.
 * 15) **Added in.
 * 16) *Otherwise, it's excellent. Good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:32, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Addressed by Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 02:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) There's a lot of short and fragmented paragraphs here, especially in the "Powers and abilities" and "Behind the scenes" sections. Try and merge a few paragraphs, or flesh them out enough to warrant being single. The current style looks a bit too "trivia list"-like, in my opinion. This objection falls under FA rule #1. --Imperialles 12:04, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) *Addressed. Cylka  -talk- 16:05, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Gjon

 * Nomination by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:46, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: More fun than a pillow fight!

(3 Inqs/1 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 06:50, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) -- Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:38, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Cull Tremayne 17:07, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:39, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) I want sources for the BTS stuff, especially the MGR-1 factoid. --Imperialles 11:57, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Sourced the missile thing. Tell me if you think it's not an "official" enough site and I'll change it. As for the rest, I think they're all self-sourcing, making referencing redundant, but if you still want them to be referenced, I'll do it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:54, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Well, "official-er" is better. Anyway, thanks; objection struck. --Imperialles 14:56, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Chack, I checked the CSWE, and it refers to Gjon as a M'haeli rather than a H'drachi. Also, it makes mention of a cybernetic tool extension in place of a right arm. These need to be added into the article. -  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 17:59, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *I saw that too in CSWE, and it turns out that M'haeli is simply the H'drachi homeworld. I suppose that should be added for homeworld then. As for the tool extension info, I'll add that too.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 18:08, 27 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just passed GA. 1,104 words.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:46, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Jutka

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 15:31, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Inspired by the CWSE not realizing that a Tuhgri and a Human are different species. But, hey - it's DarkStryder!

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 06:18, 28 January 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Substance
 * 2) * Intro: "Tracking the signal, they discovered a damaged mining drone that Jutka hoped could be used to signal their homeworld, or attract rescuers to their plight." Who is "they"? Did you specify earlier who was in the escape pod? The whole crew of the ship? The pronoun doesn't give enough info IMO.
 * 3) **Added clarification of who is in the pod to the intro (and bio), replaced "they" with "Tuhgri".
 * 4) * In the P&T: "Although initially wary of the FarStar crew, he was able to be diplomatic when he realized that they meant them no harm and convinced them to work together towards a common goal." Who is "them"? You go from Jutka being diplomatic then directly to the FarStar meaning "them" no harm? This whole sentence just gets confusing near the end. Could some of the pronouns be swapped in order to clarify who is working with who?
 * 5) **Reworded. Hopefully it is clearer now.
 * 6) * Is that all that can be said in the BtS? Aren't there non-canon RPG paths that can be elaborated upon? For example, is it possible for the FarStar crew to kill the Tughri during that first encounter when they appear hostile? A little elaboration about his use in the RPG might be worth it. Cull Tremayne 02:40, 24 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Added a little about the other option that can be taken upon first meeting Jutka and the Tuhgri. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:51, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Nice job. Cull Tremayne 06:18, 28 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Skor II

 * Nomination by: ~ SavageBob 04:47, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I've been working to expand and update the Squib article to get its FA status restored, but I thought I'd do a little work on their homeworld while I was at it.

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Support
 * 1) -- Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:50, 30 January 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Cav's squadron reclamation:
 * 2) * In the infobox, you give Skor II's location in the Calaron sector as a definite location, but in the body of the article, you say it may lie in the sector. While I understand that Rebellions information is occasionally fuzzy on planet location, the article must be consistent with itself. So either it is the Calaron sector, and the main article reference changed to reflect this; or if it is only the possibility, then the infobox reference should reflect this; or remove all references to its sector location from the main body of the article, and keep it all in the BTS. - Cavalier One' [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:39, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Hmm. Thanks for the reasoned objection. I was following the lead of Gandolo IV, another featured article on a planet, that does the same thing with the planet's distance from Coruscant. Perhaps that article needs updating. I'll think over the choices and change the Skor II article to comply with one of your suggestions soon. Thanks again, ~ SavageBob 22:08, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **OK, I think it's probably best to reserve ambiguously canonical information such as this to the Behind the Scenes section, so I've removed the mentions of the Calaron sector from the infobox and the main part of the article. Would you mind taking another look? ~ SavageBob 12:41, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Actually, on second thought, most articles with ties to Rebellion seem to take the attitude of "treat it as canon unless a later source says otherwise." Considering the nebulous location of the Calaron sector, I guess it's best to keep this info in for now. ~ SavageBob 12:00, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***That would have been my choice, too, but with the additional contradictory information I thought it best to leave it up to you since you had done the legwork on the research. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:50, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Unless it has been placed into a different sector, the REB placement stands. Leland Chee's ruling on REB placements can be found here. You can use that to reference your decision in the BTS. I dealt with a similar situation in Atrivis sector, if you want to check that BTS. --Eyrezer 21:29, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *****Ah, thanks for the link. I've added a note about this to the article. ~ SavageBob 07:44, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) I think your reference note #23 should be cut, along with the "presumably the planetary capital." Requiring the presumably strikes me as a bit OR. --Eyrezer 10:25, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) *Do you mean that it should be assumed that Metrobig City is the capital or that we shouldn't assume such? ~ SavageBob 11:47, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **I think we should not make that assumption. --Eyrezer 12:04, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ***You've probably right. I've removed that bit. ~ SavageBob 21:45, 2 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I just wanted to chime in on the Rebellion issue, since Gandolo IV was referenced here, which I wrote. Indeed, per comments by Chee, Rebellion info should be considered legitimate until otherwise overridden by another source, so listing the Calaron sector is appropriate. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:07, 10 February 2009 (UTC)

Darth Azard

 * Nominated by:  Grunny  (Talk) 12:49, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nom :)

(3 Inqs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Support thee, I do. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:31, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Already raked this squid over the coals on the GAN.  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:39, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:12, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 06:51, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:24, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Image:Darth Azard2.jpg, Image:Darth Azard.jpg, Image:MassacreonDac.jpg, Image:DuelOnDac.jpg, Image:Invoke.jpg and Image:AzardProtectionBubble.jpg are all distorted and should be re-scanned. --Imperialles 18:54, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 2) * Haven't read the whole thing, but I intend to soon. I like the character and had intended to FA him myself someday, so I want the article to be as good as it can be. :-) For a couple of preliminaries: could the "Massacre..." section be split in two? It'll make it more uniform with the size of the other sections and having two images in the same smallish section looks a bit messy, imho (speaking of which, I've reduced the size of some of the images, if that's alright - 300px looks messy). I think the P&T could be expanded a little; elaborate things fully through, for example his feelings about Isen currently get a sentence but I think it could be expanded to a small paragraph. Isen should specifically be mentioned, etc. Also, you could note that he wasn't an expert on Sith lore and history, since he didn't know anything/much about the Leviathan. Last sentence in the BtS will need to be referenced. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:25, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **I've split the "Massacre..." section, expanded the P&T, and referenced the BtS. I like the character too, and I'm waiting for the next issue to expand it fully. I look forward to your thorough review :-).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:14, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Nicely done. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:51, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * The intro looks a little bit too big for an article of its size. Especially when new info will have to be added to it soon. I would suggest cutting it down a little bit, either now or when the next issue is out. I made a few cuts here and there but here are some more suggestions for ones I thought too large to cut without talking to you:
 * 6) ** "after Krayt deposed Emperor Roan Fel" is something I'd definitely say could be cut from the intro, since it's not particularly relevant to Azard.
 * 7) ***Cut :).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ** "Valan had already faced Stazi, during the last battle of the Sith-Imperial War, and had been blamed for Stazi's escape" - this is another thing that, although it would certainly merit inclusion in the bio, isn't particularly relevant to the intro, which ought to be nicely succinct.
 * 9) ***Also cut.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) ** "who had been sent by Emperor-in-exile Roan Fel to warn Gar Stazi that they had sabotaged the Imperious" could be rephrased to "who were on a mission for Emperor-in-exile Roan Fel," or somesuch.
 * 11) ***Rephrased :).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * In the aftermath of the massacre, pursued the escaping members Rogue Squadron who had been involved in the plan to capture the Imperious -- missing a word here, before pursued. Presumably it's Azard, but I wanted to make sure.
 * 13) **Yes it is, silly mistake on my part.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * This isn't an objection, just a pointer: with sentences like "The Toydarian information broker Niffla, informed Valan" that comma is unneeded. Another is "Realizing the officer had been mind-tricked; Azard killed him" - that semicolon should just be a comma. The colon should only be used when the two parts of it could stand alone as separate sentences. I'll obviously fix any instances of these I find, but it's something to watch out for.
 * 15) **I'll check my work for such mistakes :).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * The third paragraph in "Massacre..." trails off from the subject a bit. Obviously the info is necessary to establish, but I think it could be cut down a fair bit in detail.
 * 17) **How's that? :)  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) ***I wouldn't mind a little bit more cut, but looking at it there's nothing that really stands out so it's up to you.
 * 19) * Ronto's introduced rather suddenly in the P&A, without even a link. I wouldn't even bother to name him, just say the Rogues or whatever.
 * 20) **Good point.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **Excellent stuff overall, glad to have a new FA writer. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:51, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Thanks AdmirableAckbar :-).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) ****No worries. Good work on my objections. My only concern is supporting this nom is that we know a fair bit of new info on the character will be released soon, probably after this passes FAN. Not that I don't think you'll do a good job updating, but any new info won't go through the proper FAN review process. I'm not really sure what our procedure should in these cases. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:24, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Azard appears in the latest Legacy issue, Star Wars Legacy 32: Fight Another Day, Part 1. It looks like he'll also be appearing in issue 33 as well. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:38, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I've added Legacy 32. I'll just have to wait until Legacy 33 comes out :).  Grunny  (Talk) 03:21, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Brianna

 * Nominated by: 01:42, 28 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: As recommended, trying for FA after GA success.

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Support
 * 06:52, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Preliminaries for that promised review:
 * 2) * A fair lot of the sections need to be further divided up. "Playing as a male Exile" in particular is one of the most exhaustively long sections I've ever seen.
 * 3) **Hopefully accomplished.
 * 4) ***"Early life" and "Travels with the Exile" should probably have subsections. Graestan ( Talk ) 15:58, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * "Travels with the Exile" deserves a quote, preferably something about the Exile from Brianna's own dialog.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * The "Masters" field of the infobox could be filled out a little more expansively and creatively.
 * 9) **Done
 * 10) ***Remember to list chronologically. Graestan ( Talk ) 15:58, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * Image:Lasthandmaiden.jpg is a pretty terrible image and could use a recapture.
 * 12) *Another image could probably be snagged to be fit into the BtS section; while something appropriate to the subject matter is preferable, general Brianna pictures shouldn't be any trouble, either.
 * 13) *Linking really needs to be gone over. Have pipelinking in mind (the missions, for example). Also, in particular I noticed some glaring omissions in the links for the BtS.
 * 14) **I believe this has been handled.
 * 15) * Graestan ( Talk ) 05:14, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) Cylka:
 * 17) * More context is needed regarding her parents Yusanis and Arren Kae. Avoid mentioning Kreia this early because it will be somewhat difficult to give her context at this point.
 * 18) * More context is needed on Atris when she is introduced. Who was she, why was she there, and so on.
 * 19) * Same for the Telosian Jedi Academy when it is first introduced. You need to add in why it was built, what was stored there, etc.
 * 20) * More context on the destruction of Peragus and how the Exile and the Ebon Hawk were involved. Also explain why the ship was impounded and the companions detained by TSF.
 * 21) * More context on who the Exile when she is first introduced.
 * 22) * A bit of context as to how they tracked the Hawk to the hidden Academy and make sure to mention all of the companions.
 * 23) * The Exile agreed to Kreia's request so as to avoid a conflict - this needs more context. It is a bit arbitrary as it stands now. Cylka  <font color=#00A693>-talk- 23:26, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) **Have dealt with the objections up to here so far.
 * 25) *Brianna and the Exile have a long conversation with each other in the Academy. This should be explained in greater detail.
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) *More context is needed on the mission to find the Jedi Masters. Why were they on that mission in the first place and why was it important.
 * 28) **Also addressed.
 * 29) *A bit more information is needed on Atris's fall to the dark side.
 * 30) **Done.
 * 31) *Some more context is needed to the final battle at Malachor V.
 * 32) **Also done.
 * 33) * The paragraphs in the P&A are a bit short. Either try flesh them out a bit, or maybe combine them.
 * 34) **Done.
 * 35) * In the first part of the Bts, the paragraphs are too short. Combining them would probably be a good idea.
 * 36) **Done.
 * 37) * The playing as a male exile section is too long and much of the information is redundant. Instead of repeating the same information that is in the body, maybe just a paragraph or two explaining the differences will suffice. A lot of the information in this section can be integrated into the main body since we know that Brianna traveling with the Exile is canon. It seems to me that only the romance needs to stay in the Bts.
 * 38) **Addressed.
 * 39) * The romance with a male Exile needs to be expanded a bit more. You should include her jealous interactions with Visas Marr.
 * 40) **Done.
 * 41) * Brianna also had a Handmaiden's staff. You should try to fit that in somewhere.
 * 42) **Done.
 * 43) *The article is well on it's way. It just has a bit too little information in some areas, and a bit too much redundancy in others. But it's looking good! <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 16px"><font color=#008080>Cylka  <span style="font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 13px"><font color=#00A693>-talk- 20:08, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

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S-100 Stinger-class starfighter

 * Nominated by: Graestan ( Talk ) 06:32, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: One-shot deal. Graestan ( Talk ) 06:32, 28 January 2009 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -- Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 11:44, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 16px"><font color=#008080>Cylka  <span style="font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 13px"><font color=#00A693>-talk- 05:18, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12:30, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 21:06, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 16:44, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:19, 11 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Cav's squadron briefing:
 * 2) * "Passengers: None" is unsourced in the infobox.
 * 3) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 00:19, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * In the "Role" section: "before newer craft capable of carrying more armor for their ion engines' capacity were developed." This is a little unclear; I assume it has to do with some type of power to weight ratio, but I could be wrong. Please reword a little for clarity.
 * 5) **Explained more explicitly.
 * 6) * Again, "Role" section: "Because of their light armament off the manufacturing line, the Republic authorized the S-100 for civilian purchase." I assume this means that the fighters were sold to the civilian market without modifications or downgrading from military specs? You mention that they were sold with stock armament in the History section. If so, a little mention of this might be needed here. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:09, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Let me know how I've done with this one. Thanks for your review. Graestan ( Talk ) 00:19, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) Cylka:
 * 9) * Were the Jedi pilots that were testing the Star Saber XC-01 starfighters based on Ossus as well? It seems a bit unclear to me.
 * 10) **Added a more suitable descriptor to Ossus. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:11, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * Maybe it might be worth mentioning that even though the Stingers were sold to civilians, civilians were thought to be better off with freighters or transports for their needs since the Stinger's stock weapons wouldn't provide them with much protection.
 * 12) **Added. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:11, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *It'll be nice to steal a little of this glory for the KotOR project. :-P <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 16px"><font color=#008080>Cylka  <span style="font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 13px"><font color=#00A693>-talk- 17:45, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) In the intro, you state that it is 11.5 metres in length, while in the infobox and body, you state that it is 11.  06:40, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) *11. Fixed. Graestan ( Talk ) 07:00, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) Surely a better scan of Image:S-100 Stinger-class starfighter.jpg can be produced. --Imperialles 18:55, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *Realistically, probably not. Anyone with a copy of the book and a half-decent knowledge of scanning understands that recent Wizards books are basically made of toilet paper, and Volemlock is one of our best scanners. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 22:49, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Yeah, I just tried again last night both with and without the black-paper-between-pages trick and one way there's too much bleed-through and the other way it gets artificially darkened to the point that it looks either washed out or abstractly oversaturated when I try to brighten it. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 12:08, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

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Darth Reave

 * Nominated by: —Tommy  [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 15:46, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I am not mistaken my Lord! It was Tommy9281 I saw on the GAN!

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Support
 * 1) I saw him too.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:22, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) As did I. 11:22, 2 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Image:Morne Cade Azlyn.jpg, Image:StryfeGhoul.jpg and Image:TelekineticReave.jpg are all distorted and should be re-scanned. Image:DevaronianSith.jpg is both distorted and poorly cropped (look at the bottom of the picture); re-scan and crop properly. --Imperialles 18:47, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) * Hey, Imp. I'd like to discuss this with you at your earliest convenience. Please let me know when you'll be in IRC, and I will meet you. —Tommy [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 00:26, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **I am unable to provide better quality scans at this time. Also, I do believe that while the images provided are not the best quality by your standards, they are of decent enough quality to succesfully illustrate the points being made in the article. I respectfully request that you strike your objections in light of these reasons. Please advise, thanks. —Tommy [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 23:52, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

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Denal

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 17:28, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first-ever FA nom.

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 08:22, 9 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) * "Skywalker then ordered to trigger the explosives..." Who?
 * 3) **I don't quite understand. It's pretty much elaborated on who Skywalker is.
 * 4) ***Who did Skywalker order to trigger the explosives?
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * In the BtS, you say that the rank of commander is probably game mechanics, yet he is listed as a commander in the in-universe P&T section. This is a little confusing.
 * 7) **This "commander" in the P&T doesn't mean "rank", but rather "a person who commands". I can change it to something else if it is still confusing.
 * 8) ***I understand where you're coming from, but it's still a little confusing. I think it could use a rewording.
 * 9) ****Reworded a bit. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 18:24, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Overlinking: Several articles, including clone trooper, 501st Legion, and Anakin Skywalker, among others, are linked more than once.
 * 11) **An article should be linked once in the infobox, once in the intro and once in the main body. So they are. I've only found a couple of overlinked articles, but they don't include those listed above.
 * 12) ***Okay, my mistake. I'll strike.
 * 13) *I did a copyedit for you. Next time, you should probably have someone do a copyedit for you before the nom; a second set of eyes can catch things that the person that wrote the article misses. I'm always willing to copyedit articles; just let me know on my talk page. Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 07:26, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thanks. I'll ask you next time. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 10:03, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Only slightly less cooler than Rex. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 17:28, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Is there not an article for the unnamed superweapon in the cell phone game? Cull Tremayne 08:22, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Not yet, but I'll make it soon. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 13:30, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Article created and linked to. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 15:41, 9 February 2009 (UTC)

Star Saber XC-01 starfighter

 * Nominated by: Graestan ( Talk ) 05:30, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Okay, that's all. I promise. Graestan ( Talk ) 05:30, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) More TOTJ goodness. —Tommy  [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 16:12, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:49, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:15, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) --Eyrezer 23:56, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Can we link to a mission here? "From their initial combat mission against the Krath stronghold of Cinnagar"
 * 3) * The fourth paragraph of the History section contains too much peripheral detail that distracts from the subject of the Star Saber. Please trim the fat. See me if needed.
 * 4) * I've read this sentence at least three times now. Please do something to amend this. I might recommend removing one of the previous two: "In the war and the era that followed, the pilots who chose to fly the fighters included Jedi who could compensate for their shortcomings with the Force."
 * 5) **Nice work on the editorial decision-making concerning the spec discrepancies. :)
 * 6) **Not an objection, but I changed "laser cannons" to "blaster cannons" in both the intro and body per the infobox. Change back if that's incorrect at all. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:38, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) The description section and the infobox disagree on the class of hyperdrive. From the BTS stuff, I guess the infobox is correct. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:48, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *Fixed. Someone had a better version of my editorial decision, which I failed to fully implement. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:51, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Form VII: Juyo / Vaapad

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:54, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Form VII, the Way of the BAMF, was more than a fighting style for BAMFs like Samuel L. Jackson; it was a state of mind&hellip;(read the article to see the rest.)

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Support
 * 1) Great work, guys.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 15:58, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

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Comments
 * A shout out to Grunny, who did a lot of the work in putting together this article and was incredibly diligent and helpful in this co-project. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:33, 4 February 2009 (UTC)

Squib

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 23:21, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Deep delving of multibig source pages has deliminated once-were-there problems of nottishness of littlenumbers and tiny words at bottom page. Once more, please reread again and leave here helpy words for raising Squibbish intelligence level throughout the world.

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Support
 * 1) Excellent article. It is very helpful and has everything I would ever need to know about Squibs. Togrutalover 20:40, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Ahem:
 * "Its Distincted Farlstendoironess is at the shame timesh grandified and privileged by presenting a vote to this ultra-super-hyper-beyond-over-topnotch nomination, je dirais même plus, this koovy nomination. Something is glad to have reached an agreed voting deal that could satisfy all of the involved parts, and some not involved parts, but nonetheless, and nevertheless, and evertheless, it is regretful that a inquisitoriousnessless ballot is not nor cannot be decisive in this case concretion, whatever all that might or will sit or stand for. You bet!"
 * &mdash;Skippyfarlstendoiré (Skippy? Squibby?)src
 * --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:13, 11 February 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) A couple of very minor things I would normally fix myself :S There is a template for Star Wars, which you should format those references too, and re punctuation, it should go inside "quotation marks," rather than outside them "on the Wookieepedia." --Eyrezer 08:45, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Thanks for the comments. Not that I'm doubting you, but this is different from Wikipedia policy, which is to use "smart quoting"; if the punctuation is part of the original quotation, put it inside, but otherwise put it outside. Just so I can make sure I've read all of Wookieepedia's own style stuff, where is the Wookieepedia American-style quoting convention listed? ~ SavageBob 22:12, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *I've done the blog thing. Will get to the quotes soon. ~ SavageBob 12:55, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * OK, the quotes are fixed now too. ~ SavageBob 22:10, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) **Re punctuation style - I don't think there is a CT on it :p I've just always done it this way because we have opted for American spelling, and so presumed American punctuation too... --Eyrezer 14:12, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa:
 * 3) *Source list needs to be in correct OOU publication date order. Prepare to order every source list you ever create like this, because I'm going to object to it every time. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:45, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Oops; I thought I did... Can you tell me one that you think is out of place? Also, I'm not sure how to handle the Databank entries, since they have no "first posted" date. ~ SavageBob 22:12, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Scratch that. They were all frakked up, but they should be fixed now. There are a few where I can't find the month of release, though, so I hope that's OK. ~ SavageBob 12:55, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Greetings, person. Farlstendoiro would like to pinpoint some specifics on your article so we can deal about the best way to reach an agreement. And then you can get one uservote.
 * 7) * Despite a minor hiccup after the rise of the Empire over the salvage of orbital wrecks,[68] What hiccup? I want to know more about this. Isn't the OS more specific?
 * 8) * Squibs freely mingled with species across the galaxy. So, the official policy of Wookieepedia about the "identity parades" of Ultimate Alien Anthology is that?: "At one moment in history, there was one Sluissi to the right of one Snivvian to the right of one Spiner to the right of one Squib"
 * 9) * Perhaps the most successful Squib scoundrels were Emala, Grees, and Sligh. Unless some in-universe source specifies that they were, it seems non-neutral point of view to me.
 * 10) * One of his players portrayed a Squib character named Smileredon-Verdont in a campaign Not exactly: Orrin Marko's character was named Smileredon-Verdonté while his canon version lacks the final -é because of W.E.G. failed to recognize the letter &mdash; so the RPG character and the canon character do not share name, and are thus different people, one of them not being canon. Similarly, another of the characters in Hidalgo's Rookies, Raleigh "Kestrel" Dawn, had a different nickname before entering the canon.
 * 11) * The Windu controversy. The BtS paragraph could use some information about the source Hidalgo used to name his Squib in 1993; now the text suggests that Winduarté's name was coincidentially re-used in The Phantom Menace.
 * 12) * Can I utter that your article is the kooviest thing I ever saw to this side of accented-lettered-name-ness? Gratitudexpresioness to person until a great extent. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:13, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **I'll address your points in order:
 * 14) ***Unfortunately, the original source says little more than this. It's a headline in a HoloNet News article, but there's no associated article.
 * 15) ***I don't think there is any official policy except that images that appear in canon sources are considered canon. It's a good image of a Squib, but there's unfortunately no way to extricate it from behind the other aliens. And, besides, if staged promo shots like this are considered canon, then why not these UAA pics?
 * 16) ***I guess I don't find it POV. I'll think about this one for a bit.
 * 17) **** "Perhaps the most succesful [whatever]" is what I find POV'ish. If I say "Darth Rivan was perhaps the most powerful Lord of the Sith" in an article, that would be polemic. However, if WotC's Whatsover and the Whatsover Worlds includes the sentence "Rivan, maybe the strongest Sith Lord ever", then it would be canon.
 * 18) ***Well, Hidalgo seems to consider them the same character, so I was trying to save on words by not splitting hairs over the missing é. But I can add something if you think it makes the article better (my opinion is that it belongs in the character's article, not here).
 * 19) **** I'd rather see the é. Seriously, I always thought é was important to understand Squibs: It's in Macemillian's name and was in Smiley's, not only in one individual &mdash; as such, I think Hidalgo intended to establish a pattern. It's a letter that appears only in certain planets (also including Naboo, but precedent was set with Squibs). It's more a Latin than a Saxon letter, and Hidalgo has a Latin name (I don't know where he was born). I admit, its pronunciation varies greatly depending on the real-life language, and we cannot be sure about its Squib pronunciation, but if it were simply "e", then it wouldn't be accented.
 * 20) ***OK, I can add the Whills stuff.
 * 21) ***Gratitudally I accept and welcome your applause-words into my tufted sound-hearing earskins! ~ SavageBob 22:10, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Update for Skippy: I've addressed your remaining three objections. Please have another look. It's nice to have someone so knowledgeable of the subject review the piece. It helps keep out the errors! Let me know what you think. ~ SavageBob 00:19, 11 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Ottegru Grey

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 22:59, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Thanks to Tinker, Tailor, Soldier, Praji!

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Support
 * 1) Fixed via What's-the-IRC? &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 04:20, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:04, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) No mention of Grey sneaking around outside a TruValue? Cull Tremayne 16:48, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

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Drom Guldi

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:36, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's really short (yes, I know that's what she said). 1,028 words, but still action-packed!

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Support Oppose
 * 1) One-Arm...awesome. Cull Tremayne 07:43, 9 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * "Guldi was willing to die" in the P&T reads kinda weird. But I guess the whole, "He died laughing", sort of dispels any sort of care for his life. Might want to mention that he seemed mentally unstable. Cull Tremayne 07:43, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I don't think he was mentally unstable; he was just prepared to die, being courageous enough to accept it, and wanted to go down fighting. I'll expand on that bit a little, and hopefully it'll read better.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:43, 9 February 2009 (UTC)

Rawmat shortage of 1-2 ABY

 * Nominated by: jSarek 08:53, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Finally, jSarekProject:Single Stage to Orbit has produced its first (and likely only, but I digress) featured article nomination.

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Support
 * 1) Pre-nom reviewed. Thefourdotelipsis 08:59, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) An excellent and comprehensive article. Well wrote. --Sinre 10:01, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Fantastic idea for an article! --Eyrezer 18:50, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ...dang. Cull Tremayne 17:58, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

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 * What about moving the images in the participants section over to the right? That might work better with the Main template. --Eyrezer 18:50, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * That was actually the way I originally had it, with them thumbed with small captions. When it was suggested I drop the thumbs, leaving them on the right looked somewhat disjointed.  I'm willing to take further suggestions on the matter. And also, thank you for the sentiment in your support comment. :-) jSarek 19:29, 10 February 2009 (UTC)

Nym

 * Nominated by: Acky and Ataru 21:56, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Now playing at FANs everywhere: Pirates of the Corellian Trade Spine Meet Davey Jones. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:56, 9 February 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Jinzler
 * 2) *You could perhaps add something on Nym's Factory Compound and how IG-88 occupied it
 * 3) *There is no mention of Nym's Anniversary Bash --Jinzler 23:45, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Could you flick the images to alternate sides from the top? Also, is there an appropriate image for the Tackling Sol Sixxa section? --Eyrezer 14:08, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *Flicked. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:31, 10 February 2009 (UTC)

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Tyria Sarkin Tainer

 * Nominated by: Wildyoda 06:16, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Fit to fly, sir."

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 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * "Her training allowed her to Tyria believed that it was possibly intermarriage" Awkward wording.
 * 3) **Think that was a copy-pasting error. Now corrected.
 * 4) * Link bombardment of Toprawa to appropriate battle.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Need also a link to some kind of Academy.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * Please consistently refer to the character as "Sarkin" or "Sarkin Tainer" throughout the article.
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) * The Ref template is unnecessary outside of the infobox/succession boxes. Please remove.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) *More detail on the Battle of Folor, please. Also, the capture of the Night Caller deserves more than two sentences.
 * 13) **In both of those situations, Tyria is barely mentioned. I'm at work and don't have the book in front of me, so I'll check as soon as I get home. But as I recall, she's not even mentioned by name at ALL in the entire set of chapters about the Battle of Folor, and just slightly more in the Night Caller capture. I intentionally left out descriptions of those because they get off-track from talking about Tyria herself, who had very little role in either.
 * 14) ***To help give you an example, I've given a buff to the Night Caller capture segment. I'd prefer there to be enough detail to have some specifics as to what was happening on a general squadron-level in such events, so at least the storyline is clear for the reader. The added context should, in the case of Folor, be perhaps a sentence or two&mdash;these are small detail objections, and I feel that overall, adding a bit more will help improve the informative nature of the article. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:21, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) *More detail on Sarkin's activities with the Wraiths on their early Night Caller raids, please.
 * 16) **Again, information on Tyria is scarce in the source material. Do you still want general information about the missions?
 * 17) ***Same as above, minor detail objection&mdash;a sentence or two more explaining them would be nice, if only to show Sarkin's participation in the missions. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:21, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * Please refer to Grinder by last name. Same with Kell.
 * 19) **Done.
 * 20) *Those are some preliminaries. Fix 'em and I'll continue with my review. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:53, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **All corrected except the "details" ones that I want a little more input on first. Wildyoda 22:20, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) *I believe that the canonical usage is Night Caller, not "the Night Caller". Please check, and correct if necessary.
 * 23) *More detail on the simulation that convinces Donos to break out of his fugue. Specifics, please.
 * 24) *Some more quotes would be good. ;-) This is Allston, shouldn't be that hard to find some good ones.
 * 25) *You'll need to contextify Darillian and the Night Caller charade since that was not clearly outlined earlier.
 * 26) *Contextify Tabanne on first mention.
 * 27) *Wow. More detail needed on Battle of Ession. Not to mention Talasea. Link for Ession also. Remember that her role as part of the greater squadron is also important, and not just her specific actions in each engagement. Please double the coverage of those two events.
 * 28) *Finished with the X-wing: Wraith Squadron stuff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:30, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

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Delevar

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:13, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You've been given Endor pilots, now time for an Endor commando.

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 * 1) Hoorah for Unofficial WookieeProject CCG!  Graestan ( Talk ) 15:50, 11 February 2009 (UTC)

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Darth Maleval

 * Nominated by:  Grunny  (Talk) 03:32, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Second Quarren Sith.

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