Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Livette (second nomination)


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Livette

 * Nominated by: Drgns007 20:57, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I think it's time to to nominated Livette again.

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Object Comments
 * 1) Needs a "Behind the scenes" section. Expect a more thorough review from me soon. And I'm going to be blunt: I think this will need a fair amount of work before it's ready.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:48, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 3) * Is she affiliated with the Remnant or not? If this is uncertain, I suggest that you simply remove the Remnant from the infobox and stick to what you know for sure.
 * 4) *Too many one or two-sentence paragraphs. Either combine them with other small paragraphs, or add to them.
 * 5) * You should probably remove the "Second Galactic Civil War" header - it's really not needed since there are no other subsections.
 * 6) * Context on Her Majesty's Commandos, Requud, Veila, Ben Skywalker, and Tenel Ka.
 * 7) *No mention of the battle, or Luke Skywalker, or Darth Caedus, or the fleet of Alliance warships, or anything else important?
 * 8) * What are "the usual Hapan vanities" mentioned in the intro?
 * 9) *Speaking of the intro, it should probably be expanded, along with the rest of the article. And don't forget a BTS.
 * 10) *Right now, the article is a grammatical mess. I suggest you take the time to go through each paragraph and fix any grammatical errors.
 * 11) *I'll see if I have any more objections once you take care of these. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:58, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) Pranay Sobusk
 * 13) *Please rewrite the intro. An introduction shall give the reader a short summary of the article. Start for example like this: Livette was a female Hapan coming from the planet Hapes and continue with a short summary of her life.
 * 14) *In the bio, what did she do before 40 ABY?
 * 15) *The style of this article is not really good. I'd suggest you to write the biography and P&T in each case in one single paragraph.
 * 16) *Do not write short forms like don't, didn't and so on, because they are not encyclopedia (except in quotes). I corrected it myself, but I just wanted to let you know, so that you do not make the same mistake in the future.  Pranay Sobusk  ~  Talk  15:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) How do I add a BTS for a character who's only appear in one book? Drgns007 16:34, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *For example like this.  Pranay Sobusk  ~  Talk  16:51, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Thanks. But what does context mean?  Cuz I'm a little fuzzy on that.  Drgns007 18:10, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Context is a little bit of info on someone or something. That way, people don't have to go to another article to know about something. For example, for Ben Skywalker, you can have "Ben Skywalker, the son of Luke Skywalker,..." or something like that. It can be annoying to do - believe me, it was for my first Featured Article nomination. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 18:25, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Thanks for that. How does it look now?  Drgns007 18:50, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *****You can't reference something by putting a link to another article. You'll have to find the exact source for that statement; isn't good enough. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 18:52, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ******And besides, you can't have references in the intro. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 18:53, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *******I just fix that. What else is there to do with it.  Drgns007 19:08, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

AC Removal Vote

 * 1) Yet another inactive nom. DC 04:56, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) And please don't nominate it again unless it's truly ready.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:27, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:49, 8 January 2009 (UTC)