Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Lauli Wahlo


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Lauli Wahlo

 * Nominated by: Jawaman Speak softly, and drive a big tank. 10:55, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Just a cool looking Quarren with a cybernetic eye.

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Object
 * 1) First glance
 * 2) *Write the bio from Wahlo's POV please; the first sentence doesn't even acknowledge his existence.
 * 3) **Fixed
 * 4) ***This remains; you're still missing vital information about Wahlo in the bio that you mention elsewhere in the article. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 13:26, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) *You have information in the intro that isn't in the bio.
 * 6) **Fixed
 * 7) ***This remains, and is in a way connected to the one above; you don't give hardly any info about Wahlo. (i.e. you don't even mention that he was a male Quarren.) Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 13:26, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) * In the intro you say Wahlo told Tano where to find Bannamu, but in the bio you say Wahlo and Dez told Tano where to find him. Which is correct?
 * 9) **It was Dez. Fixed
 * 10) *I'll give it a full review once these are taken care of. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 12:59, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) Cav:
 * 12) * Intro - you mention that Tano and Sinube were looking for Tano's lightsaber ... why? Some context is needed.
 * 13) **Fixed.
 * 14) * Intro - Wahlo answered them that he knew where to buy one, but once the Togruta revealed herself to be a Jedi, explained that her weapon had been pilfered by Bannamu, who could be found at the Spider Arms Hostel. This sentence is disjointed and fragmentary; consider revising and breaking up.
 * 15) *Context on the pickpocket - what was their name?
 * 16) **What was their name.(??) What do you mean with that?
 * 17) *Why was the Weequay arms dealer being arrested?
 * 18) **Is that relevant to the article?
 * 19) ***I wouldn't have asked for the information if I didn't think it was relevant. Context is important. Do not assume that the reader knows these facts, or has even read/seen the source material. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 20:24, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *Why did Tano and Sinube go to Wahlo to learn the location of her lightsaber?
 * 21) *P&T - why did Wahlo make an exception to "betraying" his friend when Tano revealed herself to be a Jedi?
 * 22) **Fixed.
 * 23) *The article has several grammatical errors and underlinking throughout; please fix these. Articles should be linked to on first mention, and you are missing several obvious ones such as lightsaber. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 23:15, April 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) **Underlinking fixed. Please tell me where I can find the grammar errors or give me a hint.
 * 25) Airdate for "Lightsaber Lost"? --  1358  (Talk) 05:01, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) *Fixed.
 * 27) "James Arnold Taylor was voiced Wahlo (Wahlo was credited as Bounty Hunter #1), who..." Check the beginning. It's wrong. Also, do not use brackets in the prose; replace it with something like "...voiced Wahlo, who was credited as...". -- 1358  (Talk) 19:23, April 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

 * 1) Unaddressed objections dating back to April 4, and nomination is therefore considered inactive under the new two-week policy.  CC7567  (talk) 05:35, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grunny  ( talk ) 05:39, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) As I told CC and Grunny, I would have been willing to extend a "grandfather clause" type thing for this nomination in regards to the new two-week idle rule, but the nominator went on Wookieevacation 10 days ago and has not been heard from since. So, you snooze, you lose. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:43, April 19, 2010 (UTC)