Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Moogan

Moogan

 * Nominated by:  Riffsyphon  1024 08:56, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Bumped up to GAN due to word count over 250 words, after previous CAN nomination.

Support

 * 1) Assuming the sectioning question gets sorted, and I'm sure it will. (: –Tm_T (Talk) 05:50, July 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2)  —Tommy   9281  Friday, July 1, 2011, 23:39 UTC 
 * 3)  Kilson ( Let's have a chat ) 01:59, July 2, 2011 (UTC)

Kilson

 * No quotes?
 * Added one that exemplifies the greed factor.
 * We don't use Eras templates for species articles, because they are considered "timeless."
 * Removed.
 * In the infobox and body, when you mention colors, such as "green", you have to pipelink it to either the Color article or the Green (disambiguation) article.
 * Both linked.
 * In the Intro, "A group of Moogans arrived at Mandalore in order to distribute bottled tea with a chemical inside, which when mixed would increase their profits." You need to mention a time frame here, such as "during the Clone Wars" or "Circa 21 BBY." Also, you can insert another sentence saying that their operation was eventually thwarted by Satine Kryze and Padmé Amidala.
 * Time and info added.
 * The same thing applies for the Moogans in the galaxy section. Please mention the year all this took place and the fact that they were stopped and arrested by the New Mandalorians.
 * Time frame added.
 * In the History section, give some context on Almec.
 * Title of Almec given to indicate level of corruption.
 * Also, give some context on the Borderland Regions, i.e. they had split loyalties between the Empire and the New Republic.
 * Worked around in the following sentence.
 * "The Perkell sector held out for several years until the Yuuzhan Vong War, in which the nearby Aargonar system was specifically attacked." A few things here. First, "held out" sounds as if it the Perkell sector was fighting against something or trying to prevent invasion. It would better to say the sector "remained independent" or something along those lines. Also, please specify that the Vong attacked the Aargonar system, as it is unclear in the way you phrased the sentence.
 * Unclear sentences touched up.
 * I rephrased it a bit to sound better. What do you think?
 * Much improved. Thanks! --  Riffsyphon  1024 06:00, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
 * "It was unclear if Mooga was one of the conquered worlds, however many worlds surrounding the system were under Yuuzhan Vong control." This sentence sounds speculative. Try rephrasing it to make it sound less so, such as, "A number or worlds around Mooga were conquered by the Yuuzhan Vong." or something along those lines.
 * Rephrased.
 * After you have addressed these, I'll re-review. Kilson ( Let's have a chat ) 12:14, June 26, 2011 (UTC)
 * Should be more bearable this time. Thanks! --  Riffsyphon  1024 07:40, June 27, 2011 (UTC)
 * You need to ref the "Circa 21 BBY," to the Star Wars Annual 2011.
 * Done. --  Riffsyphon  1024 06:00, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
 * I think the majority of the second paragraph of the History section belongs in the Moogans in the galaxy section. However, I am not an expert on Species articles my any means, so I think you should not change that part of the article before you get a few more opinions, especially from a User that knows Species articles better.
 * Yeah, I was feeling there was some redundancy within the body on the one event that we saw in the Clone Wars. Not changing just yet then. --  Riffsyphon  1024 06:00, June 29, 2011 (UTC)
 * I'll hold off my support till we find a solution to this. I hope that is OK. Kilson ( Let's have a chat ) 02:00, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
 * Hmm, how long will this go without activity... I'll ask Eyrezer for existence, as he seems to have background with species articles. --  Riffsyphon  1024 07:41, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
 * Expanded the Moogans in the Galaxy section with more details, to compare against. --  Riffsyphon  1024 05:42, July 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * I like the way it is currently. It details the activities of the Moogan in the MitG section, but does draw the connections with Moogan contact with the galaxy in the History section. --Eyrezer 08:11, July 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * So a little bit of redundancy between paragraphs is okay then? --  Riffsyphon  1024 04:45, July 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * Otherwise, nice job. Kilson ( Let's have a chat ) 19:21, June 28, 2011 (UTC)

Ecks Dee

 * I think the intro could use some small expansion. 1358  (Talk)  22:44, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
 * I added a bit more about the events on Mandalore. --  Riffsyphon  1024 05:42, July 1, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

 * And here's the archived CAN. –Tm_T (Talk) 13:32, June 26, 2011 (UTC)