User talk:Master Jonathan

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I am not currently accepting copy-edit requests for articles containing significant information from the following sources, as I am currently reading them or planning on reading them in the near future and would like to avoid spoilers:
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Finn (bartender)
Hey Jon, could you please give him a copy-edit and review? Thanks in advance.&mdash; 01:16, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. My only issue is that the LECG should be mentioned in the BTS; otherwise it's good. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 02:01, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Added, and thanks for your help.&mdash; 16:28, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks good now. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 16:40, September 3, 2010 (UTC)

Flak
Could you give him a copy-edit and a review?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:31, September 3, 2010 (UTC)

Done. Here are my objections:
 * "During the patrol Flak complained about the seemingly boring mission and stated he would rather fight Confederate battle droids also Cody calmed him down.": Something's missing toward the end of this sentence.
 * Fixed.
 * "Instead however, he rather like to fight on the frontlines and destroy clankers." Please try to word the opening part of this sentence in a way that makes sense, because right now it's not doing so. Also, what is having the last two words of that sentence in italics supposed to mean?
 * Fixed. Thank you very much.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:03, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * I cleaned this one up a little more; take a look at it. In particular, note that the term "clankers" is both slang and POV and should not be used in prose. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 16:50, September 5, 2010 (UTC)

Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash; Master Jonathan  ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 00:57, September 5, 2010 (UTC)

Gavyn Sykes
Could you give him a copy-edit? Thanks in advance. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 10:25, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 19:22, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Was there something wrong with Google cache links? I added them because I've already been asked to provide backup links in my other nom. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:14, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * When an archive link is provided, Cite web automatically makes that the primary link (from the title) in the reference, which can cause confusion when the Google cache links expire in a few months; also, if an archive.org link is used instead, those versions are often broken in some way. For those reasons, I feel it's best to make the primary link the original for as long as that link continues to work, and the only way to do so is to not put an archive link into the template unless and until the original becomes dead. Theoretically, the template could be modified to allow the use of an archive link while keeping the primary link the original, but while I've done work on templates in the past, I don't even pretend to understand the code of Cite web. Basically, it's about making sure the reader has easy access to the original page. Let me know if you have further questions. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 20:36, September 6, 2010 (UTC)

Jedi Apprentice: The Deadly Hunter Info
Hey, I'm working on the CSF FA nomination. I'm wondering if you could help me with info in Jedi Apprentice: The Deadly Hunter regarding the "Ren S'orn case" including why it was opened and why his mother Uta S'orn asked it to be closed. Also any and all information that you can find in that book/series on Yur T'aug including personality, bio, etc. His article didn't really help much. Supposedly he was the overall commander of the CSF but if you could confirm/deny that. If you could let me know as soon as you can, I'd appreciate it a lot!!Coruscantfan 20:54, September 6, 2010 (UTC)

I'll sort the info by book:
 * Jedi Apprentice: The Deadly Hunter
 * Pages 53–58 (Yur T'aug bio/personality):
 * Captain T'aug is present at a murder scene at the Lane of All Worlds on Coruscant when Qui-Gon and Obi-Wan show up. The body is believed to be that of Fligh. Qui-Gon requests to see the body, and T'aug gives him the OK to do so. A few minutes later, Qui-Gon points out a piece of evidence to the T'aug, who calls an unnamed sergeant over to catalog it. Qui-Gon then starts asking for details, and the captain is reluctant to answer questions but eventually does so. Among the details T'aug reveals is that the body had been completely drained of blood.
 * Pages 71–72 (Ren S'orn):
 * The Force-sensitive Ren had been accepted by the Jedi for training, but his mother, Senator Uta S'orn, declined to give him up. Ren became a "drifter", "fell in with bad companions", and was eventually murdered. When he was killed, his body was drained of blood, the same way as "Fligh".


 * Jedi Apprentice: The Evil Experiment
 * Page 67 (Ren S'orn):
 * Jenna Zan Arbor freely admits to a captive Qui-Gon that she killed Ren after experimenting on him and his Force-sensitivity&mdash;the same type of "experimenting" she is now doing to Qui-Gon.
 * Page 78 (Ren S'orn):
 * Ren's body was found on Simpla-12.
 * Pages 102–103 (both):
 * Though Simpla-12 itself does not have a security force of its own, Captain T'aug and the CSF investigated Ren's murder. T'aug, however, didn't follow up on any leads and just shipped Ren's body back to Coruscant and his mother.
 * Pages 107–109 (both):
 * Obi-Wan confronts T'aug about the dropping of Ren's case, and T'aug openly and rudely refuses to cooperate even though all CSF forces are expected to cooperate with the Jedi; after being reminded that the CSF and Jedi work toward the same goal&mdash;justice&mdash;he reveals that the case was dropped at Uta's request.
 * Pages 109–112 (Ren S'orn):
 * Uta S'orn, who has just recently resigned from her position as Senator, reveals to Obi-Wan that she asked for the case to be dropped because she believes Ren was killed by "some lowlife" on Simpla-12, saying that "[h]e led a life of squalor" and commenting, "Why investigate it, why drag every sordid detail into the sun? Who knows what Captain Yur T'aug could have found out about Ren? I did not want to know. Don't you understand? I want it all to go away [...]".
 * Chapter 18 (Ren S'orn):
 * Jenna Zan Arbor's secret lab, where she is holding Qui-Gon and where she experimented on Ren, is on Simpla-12.


 * Jedi Apprentice: The Dangerous Rescue
 * Pages 87–89
 * Fligh is very much alive; after being attacked by bounty hunter Ona Nobis, he staged his own murder scene so he could disappear for a while and get Ona Nobis off his tail.

That's all I found. There's no indication that Yur T'aug was the overall CSF commander, but there's no indication he wasn't, either. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash; Master Jonathan  ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 02:14, September 8, 2010 (UTC)

CSWE request
Hey, Jon. Me again. Could you check what the CSWE has to say about Nichos Marr and Darksaber? QuiGonJinn (Talk) 15:46, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * The entries can now be found at Forum:Entry requests. In the future, please make SWE/CSWE requests on that page. Thanks. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 02:38, September 8, 2010 (UTC)