Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Naga Sadow (third nomination)

Naga Sadow

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Talk ) 03:22, January 2, 2018 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Let this one unfortunately lapse during a time of inactivity for me a couple months ago, to my shame. However, I believe I've addressed the outstanding objections from last time around and I really want to give this one another go. This time I guarantee I'll see it through.

Tm_T doesn't read previous reviews

 * In Intro: "Sadow killed Daragon and escaped back to Sith Space after a brief clash with Republic forces, only to immediately be forced back into another battle with Ludo Kressh, who had faked his death and raised a new army with Sadow away." I had to read couple times what "raised new army with Sadow away" means, maybe it's just me?
 * Tried to clarify it some.
 * In Bio: "Nominally in control of the world of Khar Delba,[11] he also constructed a secret stronghold on the dark side of the moon Khar Shian, where he found it better to further his research into the dark arts.[4] Khar Delba would serve as his decoy, while Sadow's true work occurred in private on Khar Shian." Almost like the same thing is written twice, I wonder if text flow would be better if these are combined somehow?
 * Combined them.  IFYLOFD  ( Talk ) 00:37, February 28, 2018 (UTC)
 * More to come – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:&#126;$ 17:53, February 26, 2018 (UTC)
 * in Sadow's star war, "His vessel damaged but not destroyed, Sadow sent a transmission to Daragon, asking him to come to his listing sphere so they could meet face to face." What is "listing sphere?"
 * Bio gone through, good reading. (: – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:&#126;$ 06:05, March 13, 2018 (UTC)
 * Equipment: "Through these crystals, Sadow was able to summon nigh-unlimited power," ...nigh? – Tm_T@Wookieepedia:&#126;$ 10:59, March 16, 2018 (UTC)
 * nigh.  Imperators II (Talk) 12:02, March 16, 2018 (UTC)

QGJ

 * The emergence and subsequent destruction of the Harbinger in 41 ABY warrants a mention in the Legacy section, I think, seeing as it was a part of Sadow's force. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:12, March 14, 2018 (UTC)