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(1 Inq/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Major issues listed here have been addressed. Yrfeloran 06:16, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Could still transition better, but nicely done. I'm confident that other reviews will improve this prose further.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:02, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *You've done a nice job, Yrfeloran, making some major additions to this article. Unfortunately, it's still quite a ways away from being up to FA standards. Without even reading through, I pick up on the following problems:
 * 3) * The infobox must be completely sourced, as does the succession box at the bottom of the page.
 * 4) **Done. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Complete sourcing includes sourcing the "Era(s)" field. I've done this for you, but please source this next time. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:44, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Any quotes within the article must go at the beginning of sections, after the subhead, not in the middle of paragraphs.
 * 7) **Most of those were residual old paragraphs - done. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *The entire article is little more than 1-2 sentence paragraphs summarizing events. While I'm certainly not a huge prequel trilogy fan, having never read the majority of these sources, this tells me that you've done just that, quickly generalizing important topics while skipping out on juicy details. Featured Articles must be comprehensive, not only including material from all relevant sources, but also detailing that information to a great degree. An article like Dooku, for as much information is out there on him, should have dozens of paragraphs several sentences in length. It's just too thin right now. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:50, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ** There was a formatting issue with some prior authors' styles, which I've now fixed. It now "looks better". As for actual content, there have been significant expansions and section mergings. Dooku's article over the period of the movies was probably more in-depth than recently re-FAd Grievous, for instance, even before I revamped it. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) LtNOWIS
 * 11) * Image:Quarren league.jpg, Image:DookuVSGrievous.jpg, and Image:DookuBTS.jpg need more specific sources. The Clone Wars shots need to specify which episodes, and the databank shot needs a link to the page it's from. -LtNOWIS 10:19, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Muuuuuurgh helped with this. Thanks, Muuuuuurgh! Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 14) * Needs a longer and more comprehensive intro.
 * 15) ** Intro has been expanded somewhat. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * I won't get specific, but it's way too light on detail. Most of the article is just short paragraph, then a new section.
 * 17) *This can be brought to FA, but it will take a lot of time and commitment. If you can do it, I commend you.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:30, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) More stuff from me:
 * 19) * Both Sith Apprentice and Leaving the Order have paragrpahs that are no more than one or two sentences. Combine sentences in those sections or expand them.
 * 20) **Combination and expansion done Yrfeloran 06:34, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Combine the sections Jedi confrontation and successful escape.
 * 22) **Done Yrfeloran 06:34, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * You link way too much. Link onc ein the intro and then once in the body.
 * 24) **This was kind of inevitable, since the original article was overlinked and additions were made piecemeal. I think I've pruned about all of them Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) * De-link the quote in Endgame.
 * 26) **Done Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Remove the sentence about Quinlan Vos in the Legacy section.
 * 28) **done Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) *I am very impressed with what you've done so far. Keep up the good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:48, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) From the legal pad scrawling of Atarumaster88
 * 31) * Lot of short paragraphs need fleshed out or combined with others.
 * 32) **I've done a fair bit of this. Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * I'd say remove some of the shorter sections by combining them with others also.
 * 34) ** And a lot of section combining Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * Compare your appearances/sources list to the reference list. A quick check reveals no information from the following:
 * 36) ** Star Wars: Battlefront
 * 37) ** Some of those HoloNet news.
 * 38) ** Boba Fett: Crossfire
 * 39) ** Republic 49.
 * 40) ** Legacy of the Jedi
 * 41) ** And I'm sure there are more.
 * 42) ***Most of those were actually there - Legacy was ref'd 8 times, Crossfire and 49 were there but cited as Fight to Survive and 50. I did some expansion on the HNN stuff and added Battlefront. Yrfeloran 03:00, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) *Needs a non-canon appearance section. (Ugh)
 * 44) **I'm probably going to need help with this one. I've got the bare bones of one up. Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) ***I see most of them done. Is there additional information in the LEGO video games that's not there yet? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:22, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * Properly reference all Clone Wars cartoon series references by chapter.
 * 47) **Done for all IU refs Yrfeloran 03:35, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) *It's a lot better than it was, but still will need work, as others have already said. Feel free to drop by WP:NEGTC for additional help, though, or my talk page. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:27, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) From the full-fledged desk of Atarumaster88
 * 50) * Dooku's role in Jedi:Shaak Ti could use mention.
 * 51) **OK, it's got a mention Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) * Same thing with Republic 54.
 * 53) **Somebody who's read this in the past year definitely needs to double-check, but added. Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) * I'm not seeing any information from the Shadowfeed.
 * 55) **Added Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 56) ***<There are three or four Shadowfeed appearances in the appearance list, but only 1 reference that I saw. Did you get them all?
 * 57) ****There's one trivial one, and the fragment of a Fete day address that doesn't have much content besides "we're awesome, Republic sucks" Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) * Mention Dooku's role in the Battle of Jabiim.
 * 59) **mentioned Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) * Check also Republic 59, 60, and 61. I forget whether those have key mentions.
 * 61) ** They don't, but I added 64 Yrfeloran 00:58, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 62) * Yoda's lesson to Dooku in EGTTF might be good P&T material.
 * 63) ** I was thinking about doing that, but it's hard to wedge it in. He's like 7, too. Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 64) ***Added an oblique mention in Childhood Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 65) * Your EGTTF refs, at least, are all off and are seemingly removing content from the article.There's a sentence or two missing from his tutelage under Cerulian. When you reference, your first reference to a source should like like, but your subsequent references should only include to avoid errors. And also, the field of , the blah part is just a placeholder and so you can abbreviate to shorten the code, just keep it understandable.
 * 66) **The Thame stuff was due to a different malformed reference that I fixed. I'll trim some of these as I come across them, but with the amount of paragraph merging/etc. going around it is really useful as an editor in this particular situation to have more than one ref linked. Also "blah" should be full source name per Layout Guide, which I agree with. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 67) ***Heh, I stand corrected. Though the use of abbreviated referencing is sorta common. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 68) ****Yeah, there's some legacy ones on the Dooku page, but on an article this size when you're editing a section at a time it's a -massive- pain to look up what the page's nickname of the source you want is. Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 69) * All your references have the same error, it appears.
 * 70) * " Though Dooku's behavior and beliefs as a Jedi had previously been within the scope of Jedi orthodoxy,[1] there is evidence that in the period before he left the Order he flirted with the belief that the dark side of the Force could be called upon without personal corruption.[17]." This sentence is OOU and should be rewritten to conform with the MoS. At the very least, the tense is wrong.
 * 71) **Fixed I guess. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 72) * Lot of short sentences in the last paragraph of "Leaving the Order".
 * 73) **Made some a little longer? Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 74) * Need context on Palpatine. His double identity as Darth Sidious is not discussed, and the casual reader may not be awareof that.
 * 75) **Added this. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 76) * OOU/tense issues with this: "It is suspected that Dooku himself did this, but it is unclear how he accomplished it." also. Recall that EGTTF is an IU publication, if that helps.
 * 77) ** Fixed Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 78) * Jumps back and forth about his Sith status. He's supposed to be a Sith Lord in "Sith apprentice" but his Sith training is still ongoing during the Bando Gora episode. Clarify please.
 * 79) ** Noncontradictory. One becomes an apprentice first, then learns Sith stuff. See Vader. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 80) ***You have him listed as a "fully-fledged Sith Lord", not as a Sith apprentice, and then went on to later discuss his training.
 * 81) **** OK, removed the adjective Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 82) * 2nd paragraph of "Moving the pieces" could use a more varied sentence syntax.
 * 83) **fiddled with Yrfeloran 02:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 84) * "To the surprise of both parties, Dooku himself was present". Present where? Needs more context.
 * 85) ** Added context Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 86) * More context needed on initial mention of Vos and Secura.
 * 87) ** Added a little bit here. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 88) * More context needed on Ansion's alliances and Dooku's manipulations there.
 * 89) ** Added Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 90) * "The Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi then traced Jango back to his home on the planet Kamino. Kenobi found Jango Fett there, and also discovered the clone army that Dooku had once ordered. This army was now fully grown and ready for action." Condense this, but give some more context in general on Episode II. The Jedi rescue force in particular.
 * 91) ** OK, did a little more context.
 * 92) * Be specific about some Episode II details. List the factions involved in the CIS. List the creatures in the arena.
 * 93) ** Done, though the CIS stuff inevitably comes across as a little listy.
 * 94) * In general, it is not advisable to use the first names of characters. A few exceptions might include major characters, but not, say, Zam Wesell.
 * 95) ** OK Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 96) * More detail on arena battle and Dooku's role in it.
 * 97) ** Uh, OK, added that he watched from the balcony :P Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 98) * 2nd para of "The clones attack" is all short sentences.
 * 99) ** fiddled with Yrfeloran 02:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 100) * "spectacular duel" is POV.
 * 101) ** fixed Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 102) * Sev'rance Tann's role in Dooku's escape from Geonosis, as well as the Dark Acolytes blocking Windu in their tanks should be mentioned.
 * 103) ** Like Padme falling out of the gunship, I don't think this is really directly relevant to Dooku's article. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 104) ***I'll accept the explanation on the tanks, but I think Sev'rance Tann's role as the chief commander of the droid armies could use some explanation, and that ties in well with her role in helping Dooku escape. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 105) ****I added a little more context with Tann in the proper section. Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 106) *You're about halfway to my ending catchphrase, but I think there's plenty here for now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:26, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 107) " Even as the Separatist movement grew and coalesced around Dooku as a leader, the Jedi Council did not believe he could be behind the violence.[24] although he". I think your reference is eating some of your text here.
 * 108) **fixed Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 109) * 3 short paragraphs in "A new ally" could use merging.
 * 110) ** I did a little bit of addition, but I think merging those paragraphs would hurt more than it'd help Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 111) * More context needed on "Sidious said that it did not matter either way.".
 * 112) ** Added Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 113) * This is related to above, but Tann's role and actions are never explained properly in relation to Dooku.
 * 114) **Tried to address this Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 115) * Again, check your linking. A lot of things are overlinked, but don't worry too much about it; that can be corrected automatically.
 * 116) * The first name thing is fine with say, Anakin and Obi-Wan as long as it's not overrused, but certainly not with minor characters. Nothing you haven't seen before. ;-)
 * 117) ** I'll fix it as I go, but not for, say, Tallisibeth Enwandung-Esterhazy Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 118) ***Spoilsport. :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:22, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 119) * Just a general suggestion: Try reading the article aloud to see how it flows. Parts of it don't read that well, and a few small tweaks would fix those.
 * 120) * The section title "Miscellaneous villainy" needs reworded. Dare I say it doesn't sound encyclopediac?
 * 121) **Unencyclopediac...but -so- true. OK, reworded. Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 122) * These two don't flow well together: "Droids planted charges on the planet and prepared for detonation. The Separatist-allied inhabitents of Viidaav would have also been killed."
 * 123) **Reworded whole section Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 124) * "Miscellaneous villainy" has a large number of short paragraphs and the content is disjointed. Let the prose flow within you.
 * 125) **It's hard. Mostly random CWA stuff. Gave it a shot Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 126) * Short paragraphs in meeting on Vjun.
 * 127) **Did some work there. Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 128) *" She had previously been defeated and humiliated by Anakin Skywalker on Coruscant.[61] However, a Republic fleet arrived before the process was completed." These two have no tie-in, and don't flow well together either.
 * 129) **Added more context Yrfeloran 01:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 130) * Last paragraph on Saleucami needs more context, or give background on the battle more towards the beginning. Either way.
 * 131) **done Yrfeloran 01:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 132) * "Sidious also ordered Grievous to attack Coruscant and simultaneously to the Separatist assault on Tythe." Clarify this sentence.
 * 133) **did so Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 134) * "General Grievous was unaware that his hapless captive was also the feared mastermind behind the Confederation. Dooku arrived on the Invisible Hand and took charge of the prisoner." These two sentences don't flow well together.
 * 135) **Tried to segue better Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 136) * Link the Invisible Hand.
 * 137) **It was linked in the first mention Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 138) * Link to the saber forms and even provide some context on them if you feel it would be good.
 * 139) **I'd prefer not to, having just rescued the article from an unhealthy obsession with Makashi. I have some in the lightsaber training section, but it needs to stay out of the ROTS fight or else it will morph into "Ataru beat Makashi" instead of "Anakin beat Dooku". Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 140) ***Fair enough. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:35, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 141) *" In a burst of power, Anakin overpowered Dooku". The power of the sentence is a mite overwhelming.
 * 142) **did some rewording Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 143) * Remove the section header "Revelation". It's unnecessary and interrupts the events on Invisible Hand
 * 144) **OK....I did this, but I'm not sure I'm happy with it. Lose "Kill him now" quote, for one. Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 145) * Redlinks. Waaaay too many.
 * 146) **Down to three now Yrfeloran 04:58, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 147) *Keep working on it. Chances are that this'll go through a couple more reviews, but don't give up; this has potential. Have a Super Terrific Friendly-Unfrustrating Day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 148) From the squalid cublicle of Graestan (Part One):
 * 149) * Abbreviating the ref names would be most helpful in an article of such scope.
 * 150) **I abbreviated prime offender Essential Guide to the Force, but most everything else is linked only a few times. Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 151) *More thorough and consistent linking is desired.
 * 152) *POV-ish statements abound. "Legendary" and "vastly overmatched" in particular. I suggest going over the article, seeking out anything that isn't inherently neutral or makes value judgments not specifically established by canon.
 * 153) *It's pretty thoroughly established precedent in featured articles that aside from a few whole-name mentions, last names are to be used except in instances of multiple individuals mentioned in the article having the same last name. Please look through and change accordingly; I've already done a bit of Jinning Qui-Gons.
 * 154) **FWIW, for main characters, IMO, such as Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Luke, Leia, etc. it's permissible to use first names provided it's not overly done. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 155) * "Building from this foundation" doesn't really sit well with me.
 * 156) **I've rephrased this whole section Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 157) * Calling Cerulian a historian and then stating that his interests were in history is a bit redundant.
 * 158) **See above Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 159) * "Historically knowledgeable and politically apt" implies that he had a history of being knowledgeable and was apt for political reasons. Please rephrase; a shame, that was a pretty one.
 * 160) **See above Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 161) * "Dooku and Qui-Gon were forced to surrender to the pirates when Colicoid Eradicator droids threatened the factory's child workers, and were injected with toxins that paralyzed them and rendered them unconscious." – Clarify who has what done. Also, give a little explanation of motivations.
 * 162) **The scene itself is a little confusing - it's unclear who they surrendered too, and it's unclear who injected the, I did some cleanup Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 163) *More later. Thanks for your time. Graestan ( Talk ) 17:53, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 164) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan (Part Two):
 * 165) *"one of the only ones" – Yuck; reword, please.
 * 166) *Vosa was his second Padawan, not a second Padawan, which would be a no-no. Please revise.
 * 167) **Cleaned up, though I daresay you could have fixed it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 168) *"This was in a way the truth" steps a bit too far out of the universe for comfort.
 * 169) **Fixed. See above. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 170) *Explain that the Death Watch are Mandalorians.
 * 171) **Got it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 172) *The transition from Galidraan to Baltizaar, then back to Galidraan is a bit rough. Can this be rearranged?
 * 173) *No setup for Maul?
 * 174) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 175) *Was his bust in the Archives before or after he left? Please clarify.
 * 176) **Clarified Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 177) *It is stated twice that Dooku retired to Serenno and so forth.
 * 178) *An explanation for Sifo-Dyas's order with the Kaminoans is required. Why, who it was for, etc.
 * 179) **There's...not much I can do with this. Sifo-Dyas's motivations are still entirely unclear. It's a fuzzy, confused area of canon that makes very little plot sense. Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 180) *No mention of the Dagobah system's deletion?
 * 181) **Sure, threw it in. Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 182) *Establish what the Deep Core is.
 * 183) **Done Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 184) *Okay, I demand either an Equipment section or at least a longer mention of the solar sailer in the bio. Also, Geonosian sailing vessels? Are we talking in space, or on Geonosis's as-yet-unseen seas?
 * 185) **Added some stuff Yrfeloran 03:42, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 186) *"ex-Mandalorians" – This can't be worded right. Aren't they Mandalorian by culture, not so much affiliation?
 * 187) **Fixed Yrfeloran 03:42, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 188) ***For what it's worth, I think the term "ex-Mandalorian" is used in Legacy: Noob. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:36, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 189) *No setup for Nat Secura.
 * 190) *"of the &hellip; of the" in the next paragraph reads awkwardly.
 * 191) *"While gathering support for secession from the Republic" – This has literally no context whatsoever.
 * 192) *It should be explained why Sidious was interested in Sheelal.
 * 193) *What personal grievance against the Huks? This reads something like a teaser; please go into some detail.
 * 194) *No mention of when and why Grievous took up his name.
 * 195) *Honestly, I'd rewrite the Grievous section. It needs to read a bit more like a story.
 * 196) *More later. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:18, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 197) From the Family-sized Pasta Bowl of Fiolli:
 * 198) *I've made a good way through the article, fixing up some things doing a first-run copyedit. Here are some other thoughts within the Biography section, divided by subsection&hellip;
 * 199) *Childhood:
 * 200) **"However, Lorian Nod was jealous of Dooku being chosen as a Padawan before him, and stole a Sith holocron from the quarters of Thame Cerulian." By linking these sentences you are saying that there is a connection between Nod's jealousy and him stealing the holocron. If this is the case, state what the connection is. Otherwise, sever the sentences.
 * 201) **Nothing precedes the next sentence stating that Nod was caught. If added as an introductory clause, you will have to restructure this sentence.
 * 202) **Did Nod and Dooku become bitter enemies before or after they went before the council? Something seems out of order here; though, this may be cleared up if it is stated that (and how, if possible) Nod was caught.
 * 203) **"His teacher sat on the Jedi Council, and was a keen historian, even inquiring into the history of the Sith." I'm not quite sure why this sentence is here or its overall relevance. It could simply be stated above that Cerulian sat on the Council by working it into his initial introduction, unless he was not seated on it by that time. Does the fact that Cerulian inquired into the Sith play a role for Dooku somehow? If not, I would strongly advise that this not be included.
 * 204) **I suggest combining the last two paragraphs into one, with the first beginning "Even under the tutelage of Cerulian, Master Yoda&hellip;" Then, the current location of this similar clause would become "With the combined influences of his Master and others, Dooku became&hellip;"
 * 205) *Knight and Master:
 * 206) **Link to Lorian Nod's headquarters.
 * 207) **"Dooku acted as a teacher to Jinn, not a friend, and the two drifted apart in later years." Later years implies that they drifted as they both got 'old and gray.' I remember reading that they gradually drifted apart over the years but that it began almost immediately after Jinn was knighted. If I am correct in remembering this, you might want to reword this sentence.
 * 208) **"The Council soon agreed that his skills made him well suited for such field work." Soon? I don't follow; don't think this word belongs in there.
 * 209) *Galidraan:
 * 210) **The subsection title isn't all that descriptive and doesn't really encompass all that is covered in this subsection. I would encourage a change, though others might not see the need to do so.
 * 211) **Komari Vosa isn't mentioned until the Galidraan subsection, but I believe should be mentioned in the subsection prior. Possibly, you could simply include it right after the "Old Guard" sentence. Unless, of course, Vosa was taken as a Padawan when the uprising began. Any other information you can add on Vosa and Dooku's reaction/thoughts toward/reasons for taking/etc. would be very useful in the relocated area.
 * 212) **"This was partially true, as he had hired Jango Fett and his followers, the True Mandalorians, to eliminate his own enemies, and was now working with Fett's enemy Vizsla and the Mandalorian splinter faction known as the Death Watch to destroy Fett and his faction." Very heavily this reads. This should be broken up into two, possibly three sentences.
 * 213) **"Dooku submitted a protest to the Jedi Council after Baltizaar, arguing that the Council was wasting Jedi lives for political reasons." Expand.
 * 214) *Leaving the Order:
 * 215) **"He was the last former Jedi Master to be counted among the Lost Twenty, and a bronzium bust of him was created to join the other sculptures of the Lost in the Jedi Archives." So, he was already one of the "Lost Twenty" before he left the Order? Reword and clarify.
 * 216) *Sith apprentice:
 * 217) **"Shortly after Dooku left the Order, Master Sifo-Dyas ordered a clone army in secret from the planet Kamino." There is a syntax error somewhere in there that makes the "in secret" part not work. Which are you considering secret or secretive?
 * 218) **"Information about secret Jedi hyperspace routes through the Deep Core region in the center of the galaxy were also stolen." Stolen or erased? Double check this. If you can confirm this as stolen, do not use "also" as it implies that these things had the same done to them. Rather, use "In addition", or "Additionally," at the head of the sentence.
 * 219) *Moving the pieces
 * 220) **"On a mission to the planet Geonosis, on Sidious's behalf, he impressed Archduke Poggle the Lesser with his knowledge of ancient Geonosian atmospheric sailing vessels and was presented with a Punworcca 116-class interstellar sloop." You should separate the ship presentation from the rest of the sentence.
 * 221) **"Dooku's Sith training was soon interrupted by Sidious with an urgent matter." Earlier in the last section it is mentioned that Dooku was under instruction of Sidious, but this is an overt statement about training. What training? It is not clearly mentioned earlier and should be if he was in fact "training" in the ways of the dark side of the Force. Expand.
 * 222) **"Dooku had previously encountered Vosa in her new identity and allowed her to live as an experiment, but now Sidious commanded her death." If she was seen or encountered earlier, she should probably be mentioned earlier. Expand.
 * 223) *A pair of miscellaneous thoughts:
 * 224) **Yes, this is only the first part, but do not be discouraged. Many, many authors have had their hands in the text since it has been created and you are doing a nice job ironing it out as best as possible. I commend you for this.
 * 225) **If you cite something at the end of a compound sentence, it is etiquette to make certain that both parts of the sentence are from that source. If not, cite the other source after the comma and before the conjunction. If the sentence isn't compound, try to avoid mid-sentence citations unless you are listing things out.
 * 226) *Keep up the good work and I'll be back with more later.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:12, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Former featured article. Yrfeloran 06:16, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I am happy to see someone tackle this and I would encourage you, Yrfeloran, to hack away at it. For what it's worth, I recall (several months ago) noticing that numerous chunks of fanon and fan speculation had made their way into this article, so as the revision process continues, I'd recommend proceeding suspiciously, never assuming that a source tag is legit unless yourself added or checked it. (I haven't even really looked at it yet, though, so for all I know somebody already cleansed it.)  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 12:39, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I did a good deal of the sourcing myself, and have spot-checked most of the rest. There was a serious fanon/NPOV purge that I did, and the non-biographical sections are now shorter. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Note to self: Done up to Clone Wars. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:26, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Small input from Tinwe, concerning the lightsaber Dooku used as a Jedi: I'd like to point you to the direction of this image. It shows that Dooku used the curve-hilt design already as a Padawan (I'm not 100% sure if this is his own saber or just another training saber&mdash;though at least I have never seen a curve-hilted one). Whatever the case, I think it deserves to be mentioned in the article. --Tinwe 16:09, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There's a mention in the continuity section of the BtS. As a book cover, the Legacy of the Jedi cover is not really canon. Especially since there's no scene with young Dooku wielding his own saber in the actual book, and the whole montage is kinda, IMHO, poorly done. Yrfeloran 00:49, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I could use some more feedback on this(objections or votes). I'd be happy to address any concerns with the article. Yrfeloran 01:51, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Curiously enough, our own articles place Tann's attack on Alaris Prime before Dooku's use of the Force Harvester. Just a thought. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:37, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There seems to be an overabundance of small, two- and three-sentence paragraphs. Don't be afraid to merge these, or to write larger paragraphs, as long as the prose flows well. Inline citations within paragraphs are acceptable.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 21:46, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 06:21, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Very interesting character and article. - Lord Hydronium 09:44, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 20:04, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 22:44, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:09, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * I think you are going to want to use this. --Eyrezer 06:45, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * More likely, you will not. However, it could be worth a mention in the BTS. --Eyrezer 06:51, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Can we get an imagecat for Vanis, please.--Eyrezer 06:45, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Imagecat sez: Dun. Thefourdotelipsis 08:03, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Small nitpick, but you may want to explain this: "The Dark Lord of the Sith brutally tortured Vanis, effectively making a vegetable of the man when he was through" for those who might not understand what "vegetable" might mean in this instance. -- Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 07:37, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Meh. Good enough.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 08:15, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) "His actions were considered so damaging to the Galactic Empire that the Imperial Security Bureau dispatched one of their agents, Mar Barezz, to stop him." Please elaborate. Why were his actions considered so damaging to the Empire?  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 01:09, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *I've added a scerrick of context, let me know if it needs more. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Toprawa:
 * 6) *A few things I've cursorily noticed:
 * 7) *This is from Who's Who in Echo Base from Insider 74, under 2-1B's entry: "Did you know? Too-Onebee was rescued from the Empire by and served briefly with Lieutenant Tiree, who later flew as Gold Leader's wingman and was killed at the Battle of Yavin." Apparently, they're mixing up Vanis and the actual Tiree. I think it would be good to mention this little oversight in the BTS.
 * 8) **I knew his contradiction-free story was too good to be true. I've added a note in the BTS. Thanks. :)
 * 9) *Source list should be ordered by OOU publication date - i.e., what I've noticed is that the Hoth Limited card should be before NEC somewhere and the Databank entry should be last. Not sure what else may be incorrect there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 14:52, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **I was doing that for most of the stuff, for some reason I put all the "logo" stuff down the bottom, making it look tidier, I guess. However, I see that it's policy to list them in order, so I've done so. Uh, now, at least. Thefourdotelipsis 10:05, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 12) * "had been brutalized by some sort of weapon in the power of Moff Bandor." This doesn't make the most sense to me. A minor tweak to clarify would be nice.
 * 13) **I've cut out the "some sort of Viper weapon" thing to make for easier reading. I think.
 * 14) * " He was later rescued by a team of Rebels, but would once again leave in 3 ABY." Leave what?
 * 15) **Well, I said "Absent without leave" earlier in the sentence, but I suppose "missing" makes more sense. So that's what I've put there.
 * 16) *I believe we tend to link captions on 1st mention. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **Sorry, I don't follow...captions?
 * 18) ***The first two image captions. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:08, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * Context on Home please. I didn't know if you'd mispelled Home One at first or not.
 * 20) **Fixed
 * 21) * " During the debriefing, Reekeene suspected that one of the recruits may have been a planted Imperial agent, and that her operation may be compromised, but Lieutenant Am Serro pointed out that the Imperials likely had more important information to divulge than the location of a recruitment rendezvous, if they truly could" I'm not familiar with the source material-I admit that, but that whole paratgraph and particularly this sentence makes little sense. At the risk of sounding slightly hypocritical given objections on Rakehell Squadron, more context please.
 * 22) **Tidied.
 * 23) *Ditto with the next paragraph.
 * 24) **I'm not seeing the problem there. Could you be a tad more specific?
 * 25) ***Sorry. What are the four candidates for? Are they replacements? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:08, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) ****Contextified. Thefourdotelipsis 22:47, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Explain Game Chambers just a hair please.
 * 28) **Explained.
 * 29) * " Left unconscious and starving in the generator chamber, he was eventually rescued by a band of Rebels, who were able to deactivate it and defeat Bandor" Context on rescue please.
 * 30) **Difficult, it's a game and can be done in a variety of ways. The vagueness is needed to remain...well...neutral.
 * 31) ***Fair enough. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:08, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) *Context needed on Gamandar.
 * 33) **What about Gamandar? I'm not sure what you mean.
 * 34) * "totally subjugated, with the inhabitants imprisoned, the nature cut away" I think I get what you're trying to say, but the "nature cut away" doesn't read clearly.
 * 35) **I think "native foliage" works. If it doesn't, I suppose I'll have to try something else...obviously.
 * 36) * 1st paragraph of Bothan connection is rather disjointed. Clarify please.
 * 37) **I've added some context, but if you think the Tower sentence should go, it can. Thefourdotelipsis 08:18, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 13:30, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Lord Hydronium 03:18, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Fantastic work. Now we need Chris Trevas to draw a picture of Yamarus shaking hands with Cal Omas. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 12:53, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The biography begins a little suddenly, without even one introductory sentence. I can imagine it confusing people who might not have read the intro. Please remedy. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:13, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *That is pretty glaring. Good idea, I've added an introductory sentence that I think starts the article a bit better. Sing out if it's still a problem, though. Thefourdotelipsis 03:35, 14 April 2008 (EDT)
 * 3) **Looks fine. I'll read the rest of the article later; looks interesting. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:18, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Two minor things:
 * 5) * I presume we do, but I'm just making sure: we know he's male, right? Apparently we don't, but because of his voice it's a safe assumption (and impractical to have a genderless character article, too). A BtS note wouldn't be out of place, though.
 * 6) **He's played by a man, he sounds like a man's man's man...I'm loathe to put a Bts note like that on it. It just seems a bit like overkill.
 * 7) ***He's also played by a human, but you haven't added that to the article. I'm not going to push it and it's no big deal, though, so do as you please.
 * 8) * No mention in the bio of the Liberty 's destruction at Endor? Even if Yamarus wasn't necessary aboard at the time, it should be worth a mention.
 * 9) **Still haven't gotten around to reading this properly, but I will eventually. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:33, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ***I've added a bit at the end of the bio. I didn't do it initially since I thought it might raise questions about his death, but I suppose I've addressed that in the BtS. I think. Thefourdotelipsis 08:02, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) Needs a source that David Wessman created him. - Lord Hydronium 23:49, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

I presume there's no picture because no picture exists. Is there a picture of some object associated with him which could be used as a placeholder in the template anyway? &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:13, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * No, nothing at all, to my knowledge. We've got a couple of FAs without images in the template, so it's no biggie. Thefourdotelipsis 14:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I guess I'm thinking more about the image we'd put on the front page when it gets featured. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:17, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * We wouldn't have one. It does look a bit boring, but it's happened before, and it's only for a day. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:21, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Ugh. I feel all...nekkid. Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:57, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Very good. I like articles about Kaleesh generals.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:11, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Interesting fellow. Why is it that all the aliens in the Empire are bastards? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:13, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 21:13, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:15, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) --Eyrezer 00:12, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *Per rule 8, please remedy the red link in the intro. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:00, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Heh, I realized that in class today. Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 07:57, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ackbar:
 * 5) * The first sentence could do with a tad more context. It assumes that the reader knows who Sheelal is, and could use more explanation about the war with the Yam'rii. Additionally, it could better explain that the two conflicts (the Yam'rii one and Sk'rr's one with the Empire) did not take place concurrently.
 * 6) **I've added a bit of context there, to clarify timelines and personalities. As for Sheelal, I'm a bit of an advocate of inviting readers to click links, but there's also the element of "Kaleesh warlord in the same vein as." If you think it needs further clarification, I'm happy to amend.
 * 7) ***Looks fine.
 * 8) * Sorry to be so ridiculously nitpicky, but "edge of known space" doesn't mean "edge of the galaxy" in my estimation.
 * 9) **That's fair enough. Fixed.
 * 10) * No mention at all of his "behemoth" physical size?
 * 11) **I thought I'd let "Approx. 3 meters", "intimidated by the towering figure of Sk'ar" and the picture do the talking.
 * 12) ***Fair enough, though I think a mention in the P&T would be good; it seems to be an important enough part of his character. It should also probably be mentioned that he was way above average size for his species; NEGAS lists a Kaleesh's average height as 1.8 meters.
 * 13) ****Interesting. I've added a bit in the P/T. Thefourdotelipsis 09:56, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *****Looks good. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:13, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * (Not an objection): This is probably because I am tired, but the "Shiva IV" and "Death" sections leave me needing to reread things to fully comprehend what's actually happening. I can't really be specific, though; sorry. I guess I'll wait to see what others say. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:52, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) **I understand your plight: the story itself is so hackneyed that I struggled to get my head around it myself. A lot of things in the story genuinely make no sense, and I've alluded to this in the P/T. Thefourdotelipsis 07:57, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) ***I reread it this morning with some sleep in me and it looks okay. Interesting, if slightly strange, character and article. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:17, 14 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Better images are incoming. Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Mostly done, though I suggest picking another infobox image. That 3/4ths of a face is the whole panel, it's not in the spine or something. I'll rescan that one if you want, but I'll wait for your selection before I do any more. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 20:27, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Nominated. Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 19:40, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:21, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Very good article.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:12, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Thanks, Grey. --Imperialles 23:24, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:11, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The very first sentence of the article body is OOU and present tense. :-)  Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:06, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) This is kinda a big objection...but if, per the Handbook, it's not canonically certain that they're the same individual, why are we saying they are? - Lord Hydronium 21:14, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *It is explained in the BtS the reasoning why. It's never canonically stated either way, so that's why I put it in the BtS and explained it as such. Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 21:16, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) **I saw that, but if it's not canonically known that they are the same (and the only statement I know regarding the issue specifically says it's unknown) shouldn't we not be saying they are? - Lord Hydronium 21:19, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Confirmed in the NEC. - Lord Hydronium 21:57, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I've cleared up the objections here that led to it's FA status being removed at the last Inq meeting. Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 19:40, 13 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Five kadams high. Thefourdotelipsis 13:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Why did it have to be lizards? - Lord Hydronium 09:44, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:36, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The second paragraph in the bio jumps from Vader's dislike for Lizardman to his mission to Kar'a'katok quite suddenly; can some sort of "some time after his appointment" or something be added in between to remedy this? Other than that, an interesting read. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added. Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 4) * Please remember to add "was a male Gektl [in this case]" to the intro. This should be done for all character articles; if I'm mistaken, please advise.
 * 5) **I can't find the rule, if it exists. And there are many precedents of that not being in an article.
 * 6) ***Added it myself.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * "Imbued with vaulting ambition, Rahz effectively sold the freedom of his species for his own gain when offered Emperor Palpatine a way to bypass Hoszh Iszhir's shield in exchange for a commission in the Imperial Military." Ponderous and awkward, please rephrase and/or divide up this sentence.
 * 8) **I think it was the ass end of that article that was unwieldly. It's been exorcised.
 * 9) * If possible, please elaborate on why guerrerite was so valuable.
 * 10) **Not possible, sorry. No information in the source whatsoever, only that it's valuable.
 * 11) * "Rahz, caring naught for his fellow Gektls, traveled to Imperial Center, hoping for an audience with Emperor Palpatine." This is also a bit awkward.
 * 12) **I'd like to get a second opinion on this one. Generally, with these things, I can see where the problem is with my prose, but I'm just not seeing it here.
 * 13) ***After finding said second opinions, I've removed the third comma. Thefourdotelipsis 08:31, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Rahz was assigned to Lord Darth Vader" Any particular reason why you use the simple title of "Lord" instead of "Dark Lord of the Sith"? I fixed the intro one but seeing this in the bio made me wonder.
 * 15) **Well...that's how he's addressed. In many, many sources. It's his title, as much as "Dark Lord of the Sith."
 * 16) ***Resolved via IRC.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:27, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * Frankly I'm flabbergasted that you couldn't work in Luke's famous "Go ahead and cry!" quote. ;-)
 * 18) **Go ahead and cry! :P Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***Go ahead and chop up some onions! :-P ;-) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *TIMMMMMBERRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:03, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'd be much obliged if someone could replace the images with the colourized versions from Dark Horse. Thefourdotelipsis 13:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * "Colourized" -- interesting blend of American and real English, there, 4dot. Will you be doing more Aliens in the Empire articles? (I've got dibs on Gog :P ) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Nah, that's it for them, unless Part 3 gives us something interesting. Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Getting the "koovy" joke out of the way now. - Lord Hydronium 08:43, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:53, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Squibs!  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:18, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "At the close of his twenty minutes, Ebareebaveebeedee bargained for another six minutes of airtime, which he used to add "You bet"." Is this part necessary? I think it's irrelevant.
 * 3) **It's a major political speech he gave, and it's a big enough aspect of the speech that HNN called attention to it. I think it is.
 * 4) ***If it's that important in HNN, then okay. I assume the "you bet" is about him promising not to leave the Republic.
 * 5) * Perhaps add a sentence to give context about how the Ugors system was made of trash.
 * 6) **Rejiggered this section.
 * 7) * "...and being forced to keep L8-L9." Is this part needed? Did the droid do anything important?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:36, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) **It is one of the few things that Scavenger Hunt insists stay constant, but on second perusal, it's not really relevant to Ebareebaveebeedee. Removed. - Lord Hydronium 21:12, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

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Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 03:54, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * This is our first sector FA nom, and so is somewhat uncharted territory. I've tried to keep it analogous in structure to our planets FAs, differing where appropriate. Finally, if anyone has the game Rebellion, a screenshot of the map of Atrivis sector would be useful to place in the BTS. --Eyrezer 05:32, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support Oppose
 * 1) Lord Hydronium 03:56, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 05:49, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * No better quotes, or good ones for the bio. Galaxies sucks. Also, 1,130 words. - Lord Hydronium 03:56, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I should also note that the Imperial commander doesn't seem to have a name that I can find. Again, Galaxies sucks. - Lord Hydronium 04:04, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:57, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Comments