Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tarkin (superweapon)


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Tarkin (superweapon)

 * Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:15, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: First superweapon FA!

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total/INQCON 5)
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 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:26, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Well done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 21:24, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) DARTH VADER MUST DIE!! --  —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 10:46, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Dumbest superweapon ever. Great article though.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:52, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 08:13, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 16:16, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) User:Capt.Scout Officer report 14:12, 2 Aug 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) *IFYLOFD:
 * 2) * "Designed by Imperial engineer Bevel Lemelisk, the original battlestation's designer, following the Death Star's destruction at the Battle of Yavin, and named in honor of the late Grand Moff Wilhuff Tarkin, who died aboard the Death Star, the Tarkin served as a superlaser testbed for the construction of a second Death Star, built concurrently with the Tarkin. " This sentence is kinda overlong. Could you break it up?
 * 3) * "requisitioned the Tarkin's destructive superlaser to smash the planet Aeten II," Smash is rather colloquial.
 * 4) * "The Tarkin superweapon was a giant planetary-scale battlestation following the same basic principles of the first Death Star battlestation. " Battlestation is used twice. Vary it up.
 * 5) *Quotes for the first two history sections?
 * 6) *Great work.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:52, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Harrar
 * 8) * "Skywalker pulled himself into an open freight light and escaped the area, but the loss of the proton grenade meant he could not sabotage the Tarkin's reactor." &mdash; should this be freight lift or am I just suffering from a limited cargo-related vocabulary?
 * 9) **You are correct. Good catch. Changed to "lift." Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:08, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * The loss of the Tarkin did not quell the threat of Imperial superlaser technology, however." If this refers to the threat to the Rebellion, then it needs to be re-worded to sound less POV, don't you think?
 * 11) **I'm not sure why you interpret that as POV. The Empire possessing superlaser technology was a genuine threat to the Rebellion. Could you explain your interpretation to me a bit more? Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:08, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ***No it's okay, I was just reading it poorly. -- —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 10:46, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) * You don't include the secluded maintenance area in the Tarkin description section. Same with the airlocks. If you feel these are too trivial then I'm not bothered, but I just wondered if it was an oversight.
 * 14) **You are correct in that I did not include them because I thought they were rather unspecific. Most, if not all, vessels have maintenance areas and airlocks, as far as I know. :P Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:08, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) *Clean and excellent Tope, it's great to see Marvel stuff up here. Now if an author created the Maraba Tev Award for Daring Reconnaissance, my faith in canon would be complete&hellip; -- —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 12:22, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) **Thank you for the review. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:27, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 18) * "...the Rebel Alliance dispatched an elite commando team consisting of Luke Skywalker, Princess Leia Organa, the Wookiee Chewbacca, and the droids C-3PO and R2-D2&mdash;the only Rebels to have been aboard the first Death Star and survived..." - Since Solo was also aboard the DSI but not part of this team, this should be reworded somehow. (Same thing for the bio.)
 * 19) * Under "The Princess's vengeance," you refer to Vader's fighter as a TIE Interceptor. Is it specifically called such in the comic?
 * 20) * "... and Organa singlehandedly destroyed the same superweapon that had wiped out Alderaan." - well, it's obviously not the same superweapon. Are you referring to the superlaser here? Either way, this needs to be reworded/clarified.
 * 21) *Great job, Tope. I enjoyed reading this one, and have found additional motivation to buy Volume 3: Resurrection of Evil. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 12:53, 20 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Images are forthcoming. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:15, 19 July 2009 (UTC)