Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tren


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Tren

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 01:47, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Quite possibly the most boring-looking alien species ever created. ~ SavageBob 01:47, April 8, 2010 (UTC)

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Hey, Ms. Burdette didn't want to make her own life difficult drawing facial features, that's all. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:56, April 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 10:16, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:18, April 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 00:10, April 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:35, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6)  CC7567  (talk) 03:06, April 18, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The not-at-all-most-boring-looking alien species Skippy has ever seen.
 * 2) * Appearance: "forhead" means "for e head"?
 * 3) * Appearance: You should mention their lack of hair. Besides, it was mentioned in the intro.
 * 4) * Society and culture: "Soldiers on Nopsin served for a certain tour of duty before being allowed to pursue other occupations." I don't get it. Do you mean that citizens of Nopsin were conscripted for a military service? Or professional soldiers were to serve a certain time and only later they could specialize in other military activities?
 * 5) * ITG/quote: Is "devestated" a word? If it's a typo in the OS, I suggest you add "[sic.]".
 * 6) * Airen Cracken is only linked in the intro but mentioned in the body. Link him in the body too.
 * 7) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:12, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **The typos have been fixed. As for the hair, it's already in there: "Each member of the species was completely hairless&hellip;" The soldier thing is as much information as I can glean from the OS; there is no indication of whether this is a volunteer or conscripted army, but it does mention that the soldiers serve a certain tour of duty and then get released to go on with their lives. As for Mr. Cracken, he's only linked in a quote, so I think the intro/body distinction is moot, right? Thanks for your review! ~ SavageBob 17:49, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Soresu
 * 10) * As one of the few Tren who valued morality over orderliness,[1] he wanted to finish his tour of duty, but on the other, the actions of the Empire—which he took to be immoral acts—made him sympathize with the Tren resistance and the Rebel Alliance. But on the other what? I suggest splitting it after orderliness; that way you can add "on one hand" without making the sentence choppy. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:38, April 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **I think that should be clearer. Thanks for the review! ~ SavageBob 15:19, April 13, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * I know I can't vote, so these are merely suggestions:
 * "Eventually, two of the three colonies officially threw their support behind the Empire, criminalizing the pro-Alliance fighters; only Nopsin remained undecided. These planetary governments tried to suppress the remaining fighters and wiped out much of their support." I found the second sentence confusing because I didn't know which planetary governments you were talking about. You might want to move the "Nopsin remained undecided" to the next paragraph or something to make it clearer.
 * Is there any reason you have Appearance and biology instead of Biology and Appearance? A Christian 20:56, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review all the same. Both issues should now be addressed. (The A&B vs. B&A thing was because that's how West End Games did things! It still looks more natural to me! :)) ~ SavageBob 15:19, April 13, 2010 (UTC)