Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Yoxgit


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Yoxgit

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 02:30, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "You're not an assassin." "Look again."

(6 Inqs/0 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:48, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:39, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 05:57, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:30, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) --Eyrezer 14:04, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:59, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Just two things: "Producing a lightsaber and taking it to the various executioners." Can you change this? It sounds as though Luke was just showing his lightsaber to the executioners, not attacking them! :p Secondly, could you modify "Richard Marquand's 1983 film, Star Wars Episode VI: Return of the Jedi." Add in the word director because it seems odd to call it "his" film, rather than Lucas'. --Eyrezer 17:09, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The first, while...maybe odd, is actually legitimate wording, as far as I'm aware, for example, "he took his axe to the forest" or whatever, but if you think it's going to be too confusing for too many people... As for the second one, a director is the "author" of a film, so to speak, e.g. "A Martin Scorsese Picture," "A Film by Christopher Nolan," or, if we must, "A Spike Lee Joint." I've added that Lucas and Kasdan wrote the film, though, for clarification. Thefourdotelipsis 06:43, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 4) * "While living at Cloud City, Yoxgit had nothing but disdain for both his lifestyle, and his fellow Ugnaughts, prompting him to turn to criminal activities to escape both" Can you clarify which lifestyle you're referring to? Did he detest Cloud City in general, or just his working-class lifestyle? Thanks.
 * 5) **Clarified.
 * 6) * A mention of his cowardice in P&T might not be remiss, (Hiding behind a bar) methinks.
 * 7) **Well, he was just about to come out from behind the bar before he got blown up, so he's not a total coward. :P Thefourdotelipsis 01:23, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *An unusual amount of cleanup required for a 4dot nom, but whatever. ;) Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustating day.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:19, 2 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **I was getting tired of WTS, to be honest. :P Thefourdotelipsis 01:23, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Toprawa:
 * 11) * This sentence is coming off really rough to me. Can you try and rewrite and clean it up a little bit? Also, what exactly do you mean by "keep himself in a manner to which he was accustomed?" "Yoxgit, believing that the only way he could keep himself in a manner to which he was accustomed was to kill Organa, and curry favor with Jabba's successor, prepared to do so, but was killed when one of the prisoners, Jedi Luke Skywalker, destroyed the Khetanna."
 * 12) **Split. Basically, it means that he wanted to maintain his current lifestyle and income.
 * 13) ***The second half was ok as is. The first half was what was bugging me on a grammatical level. I took a stab at rewriting it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:59, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * I'd fix this myself, but I figured I'd let you rewrite this. I wouldn't really call Leia an "assassin" given the context of the events. Please choose a more appropriate term: "believed that the killer of Jabba's assassin"
 * 15) **I've gone with "murderer." Will that do?
 * 16) ***Yes. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:59, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) * I'm a little unclear on where these quoted descriptions are coming from. Please clarify: "Being a fan of Star Wars Miniatures, Erdelac thought that the "Ugnaught Technician" (actually the "Ugnaught Demolitionist," as he later discovered)" Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:30, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **It's a miniature. Clarified. Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 00:11, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments


 * Changed the OOU Rebellion era link to Galactic Civil War. You can change it to something else, as long as it stays IU. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:39, 1 December 2008 (UTC)