Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tyro Caladian

Tyro Caladian

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:53, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The journey begins. So go.

Support

 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:02, June 2, 2010 (UTC)

Lee attacks
Before I read through it thoroughly, could you expand the intro a bit? -- 1358  (Talk) 17:41, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * Place of death is missing in the infobox.
 * Added. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:34, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Underlinking in the intro. (death, Jedi)
 * If I may butt in, this an easy, Lee.  JangFett  (Talk) 17:25, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * I believe I have fixed this during my intro copyedit. -- 1358  (Talk) 17:41, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * Anyway, pending expansion of the intro. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:34, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Should be done now. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:30, June 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Do we really need to source the chapters instead of the novels alone ?
 * Not strictly needed, but neither forbidden. As the character appears sporadically, I think it's better if the exact point is specified. Same rationale as mentioning the exact point of The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:34, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sexes is missing in intro and bio.
 * Added. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:34, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Caladian researched any known illegal activity of Sauro from 21 BBY Sure you mean 21 BBY ?
 * Good catch. Typo. Changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:34, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * All from me.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:13, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:34, June 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Enough? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:30, June 2, 2010 (UTC)

The Dot speaketh from on low

 * I've sectioned up the bio a bit for you, feel free to adjust or rename the sections, but it did need to be split up a bit.
 * "Kenobi and his apprentice, Anakin Skywalker, were tracking a criminal named Granta Omega who, following his leads, had the support of Senator Sano Sauro of Eeropha." - Err, following whose leads? Sorry, this is a tad confusing.
 * Where was the memorial held?
 * I've tweaked some of the prose and fixed a few of the mistakes myself, feel free to take a look at those changes. One thing: "catched" is not a word. :P Thefourdotelipsis 12:16, June 3, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

 * Thanks to Axims for the Encyclopedia info.