Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Lawrence Holland


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(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:45, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Very nice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:24, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) You forgot your Inq template.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 20:15, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 20:53, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:01, 13 February 2008 (EST)
 * 6) Imperialles 16:52, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 7) And I would be remiss if I did not take this opportunity to throw up a quick \m/ !  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 19:46, 16 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa
 * 2) * Humor me and source the three items in the infobox
 * 3) * I would like to see a mention of his graduation from Cornell in the intro
 * 4) * You might consider italicizing "Star Trek" as you would Star Wars
 * 5) * This sentence is rather run-on-ish and could benefit from being broken up: "Although Holland was proud of the game, feeling they had captured the essence of Star Trek, and it was well received by critics, with awards including Best Simulation Game 2002 on IGN and Best Game in Class on GameSpot, it was not as commercially successful as he hoped, something he later attributed to declining interest in the space combat genre combined with the decline of the Star Trek franchise."
 * 6) * When describing the aspects of game play, consider using the present tense, since the game could still be played. Particularly, this line: "players took on the role of an American pilot in the Royal Air Force..."
 * 7) * After looking back at the article's opening quote and looking at the source, it seems like this line is secondary source material taken from the primary source, being his actual spoken dialogue. As such, I might consider italicizing (or de-italicizing, in this case) Millennium Falcon. Just because the creator of this website is too stupid to do so, doesn't mean we can't adapt the text for our own purposes. Regardless, italicize "X-wing Alliance," since they make a half-hearted attempt to do so.
 * 8) *Kudos on the research it took to compile this baby. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:03, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) LtNOWIS
 * 10) * External links to Mobygames and IMDb would be good. -LtNOWIS 09:18, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Done. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:59, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Xwingcockpit.png: Grab a higher-res version of this. --Imperialles 21:47, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 15:12, 17 February 2008 (EST)
 * Any reason there isn't an "External links" section with http://www.totallygames.com/ ? —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:14, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Linked. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:59, 11 February 2008 (UTC)