Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Nuvo Vindi


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Nuvo Vindi

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy )
 * Nomination comments:Fresh outta the GA oven.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) I support odd (and insane) scientists.  CC7567  (talk) 03:54, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Very clean. The ACs and CC slow-roasted this guy.  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:03, 4 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 11:01, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Thefourdotelipsis 00:00, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:25, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) After some FAN polishing, it's good to go.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:52, 12 May 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A few things that I should have caught while it was on the GAN page:
 * 2) * Can it be mentioned in the intro that the virus had no known cure?
 * 3) **Absolutly.
 * 4) ***Although saying the virus was a "deadly water-borne plague with no known cure, known to cause instantaneous death" is rather redundant. The second one can be changed (back) to "it resulted in".  CC7567  (talk) 02:14, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****K reworked that part. Better?
 * 6) *****Yup.  CC7567  (talk) 03:54, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * Can it be mentioned that Amidala and Binks arrived in Theed, rather than later when the Jedi arrived?
 * 8) **Yup.
 * 9) ***I added "of Naboo", just to clarify.  CC7567  (talk) 02:14, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * If it is stated as "members of the 501st Legion", it should probably have context. Otherwise, the clone troopers can just be mentioned there.
 * 11) **Contextificated.
 * 12) * "combat the enemies": a little awkward. Possibly try to substitute "enemies" for something else; the Confederacy and Republic were officially enemies, but Vindi hadn't yet actually met the Jedi, so it seems a little strange that they can hold so much tension against each other before even officially meeting.
 * 13) **replaced with "intruders"
 * 14) * When Vindi attempts to escape, it can be said that Kenobi was the one that was forced to halt his approach and prevent the vials from breaking.
 * 15) **Kenobified.
 * 16) * The shuttle can be mentioned earlier.
 * 17) **Sheathipeded.
 * 18) * Can it be mentioned earlier that Vindi was a scientist, rather than all the way down in the Bts?
 * 19) **It's in the intro twice and he's refered to as doctor and "former senior medic" right in the beginning of the body. More? Or is this bueno?
 * 20) ***Actually, yeah, that's fine.  CC7567  (talk) 02:14, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) *Yay for mad scientists. (And ones appearing in The Clone Wars, too.)  CC7567  (talk) 05:11, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) **Yay for mental instability! Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 01:33, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) Vindi isn't mentioned at all in the first paragraph of the "Discovery" section. Please cut down any extraneous detail here, try to keep the focus on Vindi. Thefourdotelipsis 23:11, 5 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) *While I agree, it was requeted by Cylka that that specific information be included during the GAN process. So who do I go with? Darth Trayus Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 04:35, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) **The specific information? While I agree that you need some semblance of what was going on there, you can really cut it down a lot. Make it more general, less in-depth. Thefourdotelipsis 22:12, 6 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) ***K, I condensed a bit and added a Vindi mention at the end there. Is that bueno or should I do more? Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 19:47, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 28) * "Nuvo Vindi was a brilliant but obsessive scientist who experienced problems with his sanity." POV
 * 29) **Changed brilliant to talented, got rid of sanity bit, and changed the broad term "obsessive" to "obsessed with" a specific item. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) * A bit of clarification on how his activation of the timers caused problems for the clones-they seemed to disarm the bombs easily enough.
 * 31) **Reworked. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) * "Dr. Vindi's sanity was questionable." POV.
 * 33) **Removed. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:25, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) **Why thank you! Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 22:53, 11 May 2009 (UTC)

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