Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Daimlo

Daimlo

 * Nominated by:OtterSurf (talk) 22:04, November 28, 2018 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

AnilSerifoglu

 * The infobox's sentience parameter is empty. It should also be mentioned in the article body itself, and the word "sentient" in the intro should be pipelinked to sentience.
 * Duplicate references
 * The article is inconsistent about the use of quotation mark for "Scorch" Zanales.
 * The infobox has a link to a redirect page: Scorch Zanales
 * I also fixed another redirect page, Legends, in the article. I really recommend turning the "Highlight all redirects orange." gagdet on from the Preferences for your future nominations, it comes in handy. ;) TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * The article needs some linking, such as Podracer (profession)/Legends, Podracer/Legends, Pilot/Legends, Color/Legends etc.
 * I've added a few more links if you don't mind, and fixed a few links that were pipelinked to canon articles. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Is there another image available for the species? The one in the body is simply a resized version of the infobox image.
 * The image caption shouldn't have a full stop per the Layout Guide. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 05:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * All of the aforementioned concerns have been dealt with. Some schoolboy errors were made, I'll admit. I also added a new source. There is no other picture of a Daimlo anywhere, so I worked with what there is. OtterSurf (talk) 08:51, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Eye and skin color info are infobox-exclusive. PS: I've removed the "white" from the eye color parameter as it looks like a human eye, so no need to add sclera color. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Just wanted to let you know that this one is still here. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Since it's an article about a species, I think you should mention that Zanales was male somewhere in the article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:24, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * I don't think the last sentence of the BTS is relevant to this article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:28, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Done and done. OtterSurf (talk) 10:41, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Does Star Wars: Racer Revenge: Prima's Official Strategy Guide explicitly say it's 24 BBY, or say something like "... years before/after ..." If it's the latter, you'll need an additional reference note. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg  Anıl Şerifoğlu  (talk) 10:52, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * The intro to Racer Revenge specifically states that it takes place eight years after EP1, meaning it's 24 BBY. I've corrected the reference. OtterSurf (talk) 11:12, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Sorry to interject here, but you still need a manual reference note then that explains how, according to some source, Episode I is set in 32 BBY and how the game is set eight years after that, and therefore in 24 BBY.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:32, November 29, 2018 (UTC)

Imp

 * The fact that Daimlo is temperate is intro-exclusive.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Can Daimla's location in the Kallea sector really be sourced to the video game?  Imperators II (Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * No, it's the Essential Atlas companion. I've corrected it. OtterSurf (talk) 11:15, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * You can't source the fact that the species evolved to sentience on Daimla to the Online Companion, nor the fact that there actually existed a world called Daimla. Those need to be referenced to some of the other sources.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:22, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Is this claim supported by the listed source, or is it just extrapolation from the fact that there was a Daimlo company that produced a Podracer? "Daimlo society was well aware of Podracing,"?  Imperators II (Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Extrapolation. Maybe "well" aware is too strong. I'll correct that. OtterSurf (talk) 11:17, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * My point is that you should not extrapolate it at all. Just state that there was this company, Daimlo Engineering, that did stuff.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:22, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Got it. OtterSurf (talk) 11:25, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * The last sentence of BTS is just repeating information present in the Sources list, and so should be cut.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. OtterSurf (talk) 11:19, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * No, the sentence is still there.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:27, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * I think you should reword BTS to be clearer about the chronology of the species' appearance. The way I understand it, the species first appeared in the game, and was subsequently identified by the game guide.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Done. OtterSurf (talk) 11:26, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Please reference the BTS correctly.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:28, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * I'd like to see a contextual qualifier for Euceron and Gamorr.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:03, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Please explain. OtterSurf (talk) 11:41, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * "the [insert region] planet Euceron" would do. Also please provide a region for Daimla.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:43, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Similarly, is "Daimlos were well known in the galaxy," also extrapolated from the fact that Skywalker recognized one Daimlo as such?  Imperators II (Talk) 11:04, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Corrected. OtterSurf (talk) 11:20, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * The "Daimlos in the galaxy" section should be restructured somewhat. First, you mention the Galactic Games and the Hutt Championships, and then you seem to go into a bit of detail on the Gamorr course, and then into much more detail on the Championships again. I think you should move the initial mention of the Championships to its appropriate place, and see if it can be made into a separate paragraph. The Skywalker paragraph is only one sentence long and therefore should be incorporated earlier in the first paragraph.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:26, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Trimmed. TBH, I think the further information would be more appropriate for The Zanales page itself, so I cut it from this page. OtterSurf (talk) 11:39, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * You have infobox-exclusive color information.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:30, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 11:39, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Unsourced item in infobox.  Imperators II (Talk) 11:30, November 29, 2018 (UTC)
 * Fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 11:37, November 29, 2018 (UTC)