Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations

 The featured articles of the wiki are articles that represent the best Wookieepedia has to offer. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like.


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So just what makes a featured article? Well, we've prepared a list just in case someone should ask that, and it is as follows.

An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;not be the object of any ongoing edit wars.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic and can be used for the front page featured box.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information from all sources and appearances, especially a biography for character articles.
 * 10) &hellip;not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
 * 11) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 12) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 13) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article; a leading quote at the beginning is required. Only one quote would be allowed at the beginning of each section at max, although quotes may be placed in the middle of the article.
 * 14) &hellip;include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles.
 * 15) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of good quality if said images are available.
 * 16) &hellip;pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

For more information on what makes a featured article, see What is a featured article?

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
 * 2) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 3) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 4) The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
 * 5) Also, if, at least a week after the article's nomination, that article has 5 Inquisitor supports and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), it will be added to the queue, and will be officially known as a "featured article".

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterwards, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under! Failure to do so will result in your objection being considered invalid.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors.
 * 5) Once all objectors' complaints have been solved (or the article has five supporting Inquisitor votes and no objections after at least a week), the article will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article".

Also remember to add Nominated at the top of the article you are nominating.

Every Sunday the next article in the queue will be highlighted on the Main Page as featured, marked with the Featured template and removed from the list of nominations. The beginning of the article then appears on the Main Page via the Featured article template. Nominees that are inactive for a month will be eliminated from the nominations list.

(6 Inqs/1 Users/7 total)
Support
 * Bringbacknom!  20:08 2 July 2007 (UTC)  (Vote struck per Single issue voters)


 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 01:52, 7 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) It's come a long way.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:39, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice job on the objections.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 22:47, 16 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  Talk  15:35, 23 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Cull Tremayne 17:51, 27 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:18, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) --Eyrezer 12:08, 13 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments Remove Nom (Inq only)
 * 1) Could use some expansion, and there are way too many quotes. Better sectioning is also needed. Darthchristian   ( Hey! ) 13:17, 3 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) * The number of quotes is simply insane. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 19:46, 10 July 2007 (UTC) Seems to be addressed.  Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:59, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) * Per Darthchristian. Chack Jadson 19:52, 10 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) * It also needs and Personality and Traits section. Darthchristian   ( Hey! ) 16:51, 14 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) **Done!-- Harrar 01:13, 17 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 6) From the desk of Ataru
 * 7) * Intro: Favour-->favor
 * 8) *Intro, Para 1, Line 3, reword sentence about "for the failure of . . . "- doesn't read well
 * 9) *Intro, comma after However
 * 10) *Intro, Para 2: Faith in what?
 * 11) *Intro: Remove speculation about Qorealists
 * 12) *Intro: Add a comma after Thus or remove it.
 * 13) *Sectioning looks bad. Why is there a single subsection under each section?
 * 14) *1.1: Reword: "It appears that Harrar . . ."- sounds OOU.
 * 15) *1.1: Fix comma errors surrounding "However"
 * 16) *1.2: Given command, not commands
 * 17) *1.2: Reword "And it was there" to "where". Conciseness should be prized.
 * 18) *1.2.1, comma after Falcon
 * 19) *1.2.1, remove comma after dismally
 * 20) *1.3, worshiped should be worshipped
 * 21) *1.3, Para 2, Line 3, add comma after and
 * 22) *1.3.1: Reword to "enough time to recover from the loss of Coruscant" or "enough time to recuperate" or similar
 * 23) *1.3.1, Para 1, line 4, Remove comma after "and"
 * 24) *1.3.1: Jumps from Borleias to Coruscant without explanation. Expand.
 * 25) *1.4: Revealed is mispelled.
 * 26) *1.4: Weasel words on Qorealist part
 * 27) *1.4: comma after "At first"
 * 28) *1.4, Para 1, add comma after However
 * 29) *1.4, Para 3, remove commma after and
 * 30) *1.4: Remove first "her" in "asked her of her discoveries"
 * 31) *1.5: remove "had in fact"; doesn't read well
 * 32) *1.5: reword to say "Harrar stated that learning of the possible connection between the ancient Yuuzhan Vong homeworld and Zonoma Sekot had shattered . . . "
 * 33) *1.5: reword first sentence of 2nd Paragraph
 * 34) *1.5, 2nd Para, add comma after There
 * 35) *1.5.1: learnt-->learned
 * 36) *1.5.1: decapitalize liberation
 * 37) *1.5.1: "for they were the only way to save his people" is POV
 * 38) *Too many quotes
 * 39) *No P&T
 * 40) *I'm a bit rusty on NJO, but I'm sure he had a bigger role than this. Needs expansion.
 * 41) *Traitor is not listed under appearances.
 * 42) * No info from Enemy Lines I.
 * 43) *P&T not sourced yet.
 * 44) *Have a nice day.&mdash; Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:49, 19 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 45) A few things:
 * 46) * Infobox image lacks a proper source and description; it also needs to be cropped.
 * 47) **Cropped,sourced, described-- Harrar 01:13, 17 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 48) * Infobox is poorly formatted: the "|" signs should be in front of the variables, not behind them. ("|name=Harrar", not "name=Harrar|")
 * 49) **Done!-- Harrar 01:13, 17 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 50) * 1.1: "Years" in "Early Years" should be decapitalized per WP:MOS.
 * 51) **Done-- Harrar 01:13, 17 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 52) * 1.3: Odd sentence: "The invasion still continued to proceed well"
 * 53) **Changed -- Harrar 01:13, 17 August 2007 (GMT)
 * I wish I had a catchphrase to put here. --Imperialles 14:54, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) *Minorly reword 2nd sentence in intro.
 * 2) *All done. Cheers for the help-- Harrar 18:18, 22 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 3) A few suggestions for improvement
 * 4) * More detail in intro about Harrar was "instrumental in ending the conflict."
 * 5) *Vary starts to sentences in The Elan debacle. "He... He... Harrar... Harrar..." Mix them up a little.
 * 6) *Clarify that Khalee Lah did, in fact, die.
 * 7) * In "together, they would capture the elusive Jedi," (Resurgence, paragraph 3), "would" should be changed to "planned to," since they did not capture Solo.
 * 8) *Way too many "He's" at the beginning of sentences (four in a row) in the 3rd paragraph of Zonama Sekot.
 * 9) *In a skirmish with Anor in which he very much had the traitorous Intendant on the back foot? What does this mean?
 * 10) *Other than that, the article is pretty good, especially on the P&T. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:42, 17 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) **Taken into account and changed. Thanks Hobbes, and took out the "back foot" bit - its an English expression for when you're beating someone in a fight.-- Harrar 18:18, 22 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 12) Source it properly. Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:52, 23 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) *Can you elaborate? By "it" do you mean the article in general? If so, I'm not 100% sure on how to do it properly. -- Harrar 20:45, 28 August 2007 (GMT)
 * 14) **Specifically:
 * 15) *** Early years: "However, he continued to serve the government of Shimrra Jamaane for many years, viewing the Supreme Overlord as the conduit to the gods."
 * 16) *** The duty of the priest: Third paragraph.
 * 17) *** Departure into the unknown: "The deception priest, if that was who he continued to be after such a journey of self-discovery, remained on the living planet and led his people to their new future."
 * 18) *** Personality and traits: "It was this loyalty to the Yuuzhan Vong which gave Harrar the strength to seemingly betray them."
 * 19) ***And the infobox, while we're at it. Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:07, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) **All sourced. Thanks for your help -- Harrar 11:36, 03 September 2007 (GMT)
 * Add to the BTS some general info about the character. Ie Harrar first appeared in X, created by Y, or some such.
 * Why isn't the depiction from the cover of The Final Prophecy used at all? I would argue it has higher canonicity than the Gamer one. And tbh, I don't think there is enough of a difference in the depictions to only use one. --Eyrezer 06:19, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
 * I doubt it has higher canonicity. And the Gamer one is probably more suited to the infobox. Thefourdotelipsis 08:11, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Well it is only authorial intent. As to it being better suited to infobox, sure. But to not use the pic at all? It's madness! Maybe I'll just have to add it myself... --Eyrezer 12:00, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) He's not in Enemy Lines I - that appears to have been an erroneous appearance. That's everything about Harrar there as far as I know. P&T sourced, no redlinks, referencing. If anyone could help with pictures that'd be nice. Harrar  16:21, 14 August 2007 (GMT)
 * Ok, thanks for working on it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:39, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) *Really sorry about striking people's objections, I mistakenly assumed that's what you did after you had acted upon the suggestions...now I know. Harrar 15:49, 15 August 2007 (GMT)
 * Just curious: should the nominator's vote be discounted because of this? He only has 2 mainspace edits. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:03, 18 September 2007 (UTC)
 * I'll take that as a yes, than. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 23:09, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1)   Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:04, 31 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Doesn't look like it's going anywhere. Green Tentacle (Talk) 13:38, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)   Greyman ( Paratus ) 19:30, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 4)   Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 01:46, 24 August 2007 (UTC)

(3 Inq/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) I've worked long on this article, and I think it is worthy. Any comments/criticism would be helpful.&mdash; Darthtyler Talk 01:44, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:16, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  Talk 23:31, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:08, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 15:20, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Ozzel 04:51, 21 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:35, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 22:01, 10 September 2007 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) '''From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * Remove speculation on origin/parents' history
 * 3) * Not enough explanation of sunnydew nectar. Doesn't make much sense.
 * 4) * Wicket and Teebo incident section doesn't make much sense. There's irrelevant information that could be condensed, but it doesn't explain why they need to bother Gantu.
 * 5) * Wicket and Teebo's escape section doesn't make much sense either. It's written more like part of Teebo's bio, not Gantu's. The action is centered around the deeds of the Ewoks, not the subject (Gantu). Still don't get the whole sunnydew/Zandor Rocker thing.
 * 6) * P&T is rather short.
 * 7) * Is "Sunnydew nectar" a) supposed to be capitalized b) need to be linked three or four times?
 * 8) **Always hard to tell with comics, by my feeling is: no. I fixed the case, and it seems the links have already been fixed. -- Ozzel
 * 9) * Remove referencing from intro, per Sourcing.
 * 10) * Intro just doesn't read well, particularly the second paragraph.
 * 11) **Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:37, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Um, are you being sarcastic? (that last line about the super happy un frustrating part.)&mdash; Darthtyler Talk 16:39, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) ****Not that it matters, but no, I'm not being sarcastic. I don't want people to think it's personal and that I'm picking on them- I do this to everyone. The exact phrasing was inspired by Darth Culator. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:42, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) *****Well that makes sense too, I guess.&mdash; Darthtyler Talk 16:48, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 15) Remove bullets from behind the scenes, the Lilo and Stitch bit has nothing to do with anything, fix the source on Image:Coruscanti ogre vs Divto.jpg, referencing should be per paragraph or maybe removed entirely since it's single source, which also means you don't need the first appearance bit. Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:22, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) *Done.&mdash; Darthtyler Talk 17:29, 27 July 2007 (UTC)
 * 17) I'd like to see the intro be fleshed out. I don't think it's long enough for the Main Page yet. -- Ozzel 08:07, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) * I tweaked it a little bit, but I agree. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 13:30, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 19) Speculation in the Behind the scenes section. --Imperialles 19:39, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) *Speculation removed. I will also conduct a copyedit. I suppose I'm "adopting" this abandoned FAN. - Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 22:01, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * '''From the lair of Hobbes15
 * As a single source nom, no references are required; the ones in the article can be taken out.
 * Greedy and selfish in intro are POV.
 * Why were they looking for sunnydew nectar?
 * Where did Wicket get the Rainbow Crystal? The last the article says, Ebab is still guarding it.
 * Source for BTS section unless it is the same as the one Gantu appears in; if not, my first objection is null and void.
 * That's all I have. I agree with Graestan, though, and believe that this article is too lanky for FAN, and might be better for the less demanding GAN. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 05:19, 15 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * I think (and I am not alone) that there is not enough information from the source on Gantu (barring needless fluff) to make a Featured Article. Perhaps a Good Article Nomination would be more successful. - Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 04:03, 11 September 2007 (UTC)

(3 Inq/5 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) Previously featured.  Chack Jadson  Talk 14:36, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) [[Image:The Death of Ki-Adi-Mundi.jpg|40px]]  Jediknight19bby  ( Jedi High Council Chambers! ) 00:45, 11 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:45, 23 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Unit 8311 15:25, 25 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 5)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 21:36, 7 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Thefourdotelipsis 07:21, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) --Aabsdu 14:39, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) Even if he is a droid, it's a good read. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Conflicting sources should be sorted out. [[Image:The Death of Ki-Adi-Mundi.jpg|40px]]  Jediknight19bby  ( Jedi High Council Chambers! ) 19:58, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) The article says "Fighting broke out all over Pau City between droid and clone forces, destroying large parts of the sinkhole," and cites Revenge of the Sith. But I didn't see the sinkhole itself sustaining any damage when I saw the film . -LtNOWIS 01:56, 12 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) * Also, I don't think there should be quite so many inter-section quotes, especially in "Endgame." -LtNOWIS 01:56, 12 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) **Fixed.  Chack Jadson  Talk 23:01, 12 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 6) * Needs a reference at the end of "In the service of San Hill"
 * 7) *Needs a reference at the end of "The beginning of the war"
 * 8) * A bit more information from Labyrinth of Evil is needed.
 * 9) *IIRC, LOE has details on Belderone, etc, particularly when he rescues Gunray. I'd like to see that expounded upon. Some guy 15:24, 21 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) **Ah. Sorry, some guy. ;)  Chack Jadson  Talk 22:42, 21 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) * Some sticky wording in the death section, particularly in "However, during the fight, Kenobi had pulled one of Grievous's chest plates off, Grievous's armor having been previously damaged by Windu, revealing the synth-skin gutsack holding Grievous's remaining organs"<s?
 * 12) *P&T has no mention of his "softer" (okay, maybe just less bloodthirsty) side with Kunmar.
 * 13) *First lines of talents needs ref'd.
 * 14) *(Talents) "Formal forms"? Reword please.
 * 15) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Unfrustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:32, 16 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) **Fixed.  Chack Jadson  Talk 20:09, 20 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 17) I'd like to see a solid source for the Gary Oldman thing. Also, you might want to mention George's plans for effing with Grivie's history in the upcoming cartoon. -- Ozzel 03:29, 20 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) **Sourced the first. For the second, where did you find that?  Chack Jadson  Talk 21:38, 23 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 19) I may be wrong, but I would think that the content from the Grievous comic would need a bit more fleshing out than just a passing mention. Thefourdotelipsis 23:37, 28 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) * Actually, the coverage of things such as the Clone Wars Adventures books are far too light. And sometimes non existent. Thefourdotelipsis 23:39, 28 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) Far too many images (Criteria 15). --Imperialles 19:45, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) Unsourced entries in the trivia section. Come to think of it, we should probably either get rid of the trivia section entirely, or merge the interesting parts with other sections. --Imperialles 14:18, 1 September 2007 (UTC)
 * No, I think the trivia section should be kept. It'll be interesting information for some people. Unit 8311 16:57, 1 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) **Oh, God, didn't see that before. Get rid of the Trivia section, for God's sake. Any information that is really relevant will be important enough to be integrated into other sections. Thefourdotelipsis 13:15, 2 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Just a couple of minor things:
 * 3) * Yes, get rid of the trivia section, per 4dot's argument. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:45, 2 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) * Please source the following information in the infobox: Homeworld, death, eye color, and cybernetics. I would also like to see his species sourced since it is not blatantly obvious like some characters.
 * 5) *The intro could stand to be expanded by a couple sentences; major events, etc. His death should also be mentioned at the end of the intro.
 * 6) *Looks/reads good otherwise :) Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:10, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) Needs info from Dark Jedi --Eyrezer 12:39, 3 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) *The problem with that is that we don't know when exactly that's set. Unit 8311 12:42, 3 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) **It still needs to be determined, or written into the article somehow. Otherwise, without it, the article is incomplete per FAN standards. Greyman ( Paratus )
 * 10) ***Yeah, I'd say just give it your best guess and leave a note ref if you think it needs it. -- Ozzel 01:42, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) ****Done. Yes, I paraphased it from the Dark Jedi article, but the most important thing is that it's there. :) Unit 8311 16:20, 7 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) Interwiki links are woefully inadequate. -LtNOWIS 06:49, 8 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) *Fixed. -LtNOWIS 21:23, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) I'd like to see the introduction rewritten to remove POV ("fearsome") and poor prose ("He earned the rank of Supreme Commander, and as the commander,"). --Imperialles 14:19, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 15) *Fixed.  Chack Jadson  Talk 19:59, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) Unsourced image: Image:30th Lo General GrievousPreCyborg.jpg -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 19:56, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 17) *Fixed.  Chack Jadson  Talk 22:56, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) Few things:
 * 19) *I'd like to see BTS info on the publicity for Grievous; where he was first revealed, how he was first just known as "the new bad guy", etc.
 * 20) *Also, BTS statements need sourcing. Some have sourcing in the text, so not those, but stuff like the entire first paragraph, the cough, and the information on the upcoming series. - Lord Hydronium 10:30, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) Per Hydronium- sourcing needed.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 13:35, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) *Fixed it up. Review it and let me know what you think. Sorry it took me so long.  Chack Jadson  Talk 01:29, 21 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 23) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 24) *No mention of the attack of Coruscant in intro? A little bit should be added, at least. 
 * 25) *Ref affiliation section of infobox.
 * 26) *3 redlinks- kind of edges the limit, although this isn't a full-fledged objection.
 * 27) **Still two; however, not enough to object. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:41, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 28) *In the last paragraph of Victorious on all Fronts, clarify the sequence of events. Grievous didn't know Gunray's mechnochair had been responsible for the leak of info until after the battle; however, he was suspicious of Gunray, and confronted him, which is the reason Gunray admitted losing the mechnochair. Because of this, Grievous didn't suspect anything was amiss when he led the assault on Belderone.
 * 29) *"Palpatine had been taken to a secret bunker aboard a maglev train;. Grievous and his MagnaGuards dueled the Jedi Mace Windu and Kit Fisto on top of the train." Reword this somehow so it makes sense.
 * 30) *Tis all from me. Interesting read. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 03:56, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 31) **Sorted that. Unit 8311 17:08, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 32) ***Thanks. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:41, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 33) ****Thanks for the help 8311.  Chack Jadson  Talk 01:29, 21 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Well written overall and a pleasure to read. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:32, 16 August 2007 (UTC)

(3 Inqs/5 Users/7 total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 00:01, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Cull Tremayne 00:49, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) You know Platt is where it's at! -- Ozzel 00:51, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Worthy long before this nomination. jSarek 00:53, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) That's how I like my FA's --Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:48, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) --Master Starkeiller 14:07, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Ah, the FAN which I've been waiting months for. Finally got through the bugger, well done. Greyman ( Paratus ) 16:50, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) Sheesh. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * It's very...well...BTS'y in the bio. "Probably" this and "It is noted" that...I don't know exactly how you can work around it, but I don't think it's particularly desirable. Thefourdotelipsis 01:52, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * I tackled some of the worst of the prose. I leave it to Ey to decide whether to move the rest of the speculation to the Bts or Notes, or to leave it in a less florid state in the main text. jSarek 00:22, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * From the lair of Hobbes15
 * Three redlinks? They must go! :P (Not a full objection, but... a little close to the limit, I guess)
 * Could you ref the eye color and affiliations section of the infobox, please? The eye color isn't that obvious in her pictures.
 * "...Okeefe got the alcohol off him at the established cost with small favor thrown in"? Reword the "favor" part so it makes more sense.
 * A lot of un-refed content in Repaying the Debt. Is it all in Smuggler's Log 3?
 * As for the BTS'yness of the bio, couldn't we just say that Okeefe somehow managed to recover Bee-Zerobee and be done with it. The info on how it is surprising Okeefe could have recovered Bee-Zerobee can go in the BTS.
 * Just to clarify this, you are aware that it does not appear in the main text, but rather as a footnote? --Eyrezer 04:52, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Hmmm... I think it was in the main text when I read it. Anyway, someone must have fixed it. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:28, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * What likely happened is that you opened the page for editing and read that, which shows the ftnotes in with the rest of the text but with s etc around it, rather than reading the actual text as it would have appeared on the site. --Eyrezer 22:55, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * That must be it; I was rewording most of the sections in some way. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 00:25, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * "This was not to say Okeefe was unaffected by the Rebellion enveloping the galaxy"? Obviously not, she's been fighting Imperials and turned one over to the Rebels. You might want to reword this, since the earlier paragraph is definitely not implying Okeefe was unaffected by the Rebellion.
 * "...The presence of a Twi'lek made this impossible"? Why?
 * He wasn't Human so obviously not an Imperial. DO you think this needs to be spelt out?
 * Sorry; I thought you meant that the Imperials had a Twi'lek among them, and I wondered why a Twi'lek could not be bluffed just as easily as a human. Forgot that Thrawn was a special case. Never mind. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:28, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Could the stuff about Moorja's location be moved to the BTS?
 * Removed the ftnote as it is noted on Moorja's page already. --Eyrezer 05:08, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Hmmm... maybe something was wrong with my computer, and the footnotes were inserted in the main text. Anyway, fixed, although I don't mind it as a footnote; I just thought it was in the main text. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 22:28, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Probably the same thing with footnotes as before. If you want it back, that's fine, I saw it in the main text, so I figured it might be BTS info. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 00:25, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Should "hid" be hit? I wasn't sure, so I thought I'd bring it up here (Section 1.10.1)
 * Yeah it should have been. Fixed
 * Ref the last paragraph of Vengeance Strike.
 * Done
 * A more conclusive ending would be nice, but if there is no more information, I'm fine with it as it is currently.
 * Is this like Stele, where the ending's kind of... sudden? Because if so, it's fine. It just seems a little anti-climactic, I guess. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 00:25, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Is Gathering Shadows a WEG product? If not, reword the BTS a bit so this is mentioned.
 * Clarified. --Eyrezer 08:42, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * That's all. I fixed all the minor stuff I found, and I'm impressed with the length of this article. Good work. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 19:12, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Currently the 48th longest article on Wookieepedia. Just to give you an idea of the length. :) --Eyrezer 00:18, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Did you forget that you're an Inq? :-P Cull Tremayne 00:49, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * If I'm not sure about an article, I vote as a regular user. :) Then if it is struggling, I can change my vote later lol --Eyrezer 03:50, 11 September 2007 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Sikon 17:24, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 11:56, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Sikon, this is bloody good. I demand more FAs out of you, sonny! Thefourdotelipsis 02:38, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Per 4dot. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) A few things:
 * 2) * The infobox image (Image:Kotor.jpg) has a Dark Horse watermark is generally low quality. Replace this.
 * 3) ** Replaced. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) * The introduction needs a good rewrite. Things such as Dark Horse's other current Star Wars comics and the chronology of the series are best discussed in other sections.
 * 5) ** Addressed the issues you mentioned - tell me if something is still wrong. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) *There's a few punctuation errors throughout the article: several instances of punctuation being placed outside quotation marks, and em dashes are erroneously surrounded by spaces.
 * 7) ** Corrected em dashes. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * The "2007: Days/Knights" subsection of "Production" has several two-sentence paragraphs. Rewrite if possible. Why is the section given the affix of "Days/Knights," when the 2006 section has no affix at all?
 * 9) ** Explained on IRC, also see below. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * The section "Core characters" should either cover only the core characters, or be renamed to "Major characters" or something similar.
 * 11) ** Renamed to just "Characters". - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) * The thin paragraph issue applies to most of the "Plot" section as well, particularly the subsections "Commencement" and "Days of Fear, Nights of Anger."
 * 13) ** Expanded small paragraphs. - Sikon 14:56, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) * There's no reception section, and no mention of sales figures.
 * --Imperialles 17:50, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) ** Added. - Sikon 14:56, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) The core characters section needs to be wookified. At the very least, it needs a grammar cleanup.  Chack Jadson  Talk 20:09, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Image:Kotorteam.jpg needs to be properly sourced with the Information template. --Eyrezer 23:07, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) * Done. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) From the Grey of Man:
 * 3) * Image:Kotor.jpg is currently tagged with . Please rectify if this is going to be used.
 * 4) ** Deleted. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) * The infobox picture isn't really the best one that is out there, though I can understand why it was chosen. Maybe the following one, which I've linked to, would be better enjoyed by the community? Especially since it has full color. Image:Kotorhandbookcoverandtitle.jpg, just a suggestion.
 * 6) ** Done. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) * None of the character information in the "Core character" section has any reference tags. Please source info from the necessary appearances/sources.
 * 8) * What's the source for "&hellip;abbreviated as KotOR&hellip;"? I know it is often referred to as that around here, but is there a source for it being used in the comics/interviews/media etc.?
 * 9) ** Sourced. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * The caption ("Dark Horse promotional image and preliminary issue 0 cover") is not needed below the picture in the infobox.
 * 11) ** Removed. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) * Each entry in the Core Characters section needs to be expanded, IMO; and as already pointed out, needs to be cleaned up.
 * 13) ** See below about expansion. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) * It may have been intentional, but Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic 0: Crossroads is not listed, along with the other comics, in the "Media" section. All of the other comics which were collected into the TPB Commencement are listed, and Crossroads was collected in it as well&mdash;please include.
 * 15) ** It's there, see below. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) *Please completely source the "Continuity" section&mdash;only a few paragraphs and/or pieces of information are currently sourced. Even though some of the information may be obvious, it should still be sourced to comply with FAN standards.
 * 17) ** Sourced. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Better, but the first two paragraphs still need ref tags. The first paragraph needs at least one, if not more, ref tags of where the KotOR comics reference the TOTJ comics and the KOTOR games. The second paragraph simply needs a ref tag from either the Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic video game or even the Strategy Guide since it details some of the information listed. Using both wouldn't be opposed to either. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 19) * Formatting for the "Notes and references" section should be a scroll box at the very least.
 * 20) ** Done. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) *Once the writing objections listed by Imp, Chack, and myself have been looked after, I'll go through the actual writing of the article. I don't see any point in doing it before hand.
 * 22) *In the "Continuity" section, the first sentence says "Set in the years 3,964 BBY and 3,963 BBY, at a midpoint between Tales of the Jedi and the video games&hellip;". It needs to be made clear that that the video games are Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic and Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic II: The Sith Lords, as right now a wayward reader could mistake it for all the video games.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 23) *I feel that introduction should make some mention about the fan reception of the series as well as any other relevant Real World impacts it has had&mdash;especially since it's an article about the overall series. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 24) **An interesting FAN which I could see becoming the template for future projects like it. Greyman ( Paratus ) 00:57, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 25) From the beaker of Lord Hydronium:
 * 26) *Expand on a few things in "Plot Summary", particularly the second paragraph of "Commencement". First, some explanation of the knighting ceremony, and second, a few more details on the vision, like the figure you mention later.
 * 27) *Nothing about Vector.
 * 28) *No other complaints here. - Lord Hydronium 09:16, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 29) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 30) *Source handbook release.
 * 31) *Copyedit plot summary
 * 32) *This is not the easiest of objections to resolve, but I'd like the prose in the plot summaries to be a little better. Some of the word choices don't seem to quite line up- I think a "misled" in there is kind of awkward. Another example is the way the last sentence of Flashpoint reads- it doesn't seem to flow. Also, a bit more detail in some parts, e.g. "After Zayne learned this." What did he learn- that the banker was his father? That the banker had been captured? Both?
 * 33) *Maybe it's because it has been freshly released/not fully released, but the Daze of Hate section is abominably small and hard to read/follow.
 * 34) *This is definitely not a hard and fast rule, but what about having an authors/pencillers/creators section on the page? Ozzel's SOTE soundtrack FA has a paragraph about McNeely and some of his background work, and I think that an entire series merits a section on the creators and their background, at least briefly.
 * 35) *Disambig link to other KotOR products needed.
 * 36) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating Day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:24, 19 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Nominated on Sikon's behalf per request on IRC. -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 17:24, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Confirming the request on IRC. :) Plus some responses:
 * Sourced the "KotOR" abbreviation.
 * Replaced infobox picture per Greyman's suggestion, deleted Image:Kotor.jpg. Removed caption.
 * Removed references to other DH titles and specific years from the intro. Tell me if anything else needs to be done about it.
 * As I told Imp on IRC, 2007 has the "Days/Knights" subtitle because that's how Dark Horse refers to that meta-arc. There was no codename for 2006, hence no subtitle.
 * Renamed "Core characters" to just "Characters". But what is meant by "wookifying" this section? I'm not sure it needs to be expanded, either - it's an article about the overall series, so I tried to be as brief and concise as possible when describing the individual plot summaries and characters. Entries on individual arcs may have longer descriptions.
 * I still feel that the character entries should be longer, but I understand your reasoning and struck that particular objection. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Removed spaces around mdashes.
 * Reception section: I'll add it soon.
 * Thin paragraphs: I'll expand them.
 * Sourced the unsourced part of the "Continuity" section. Things without a reference footnote are sourced in-text - for example, "Alek references the Great Sith War in Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic 0: Crossroads."
 * Issue 0: Crossroads is already in the Media section, just out-of-order. Fourdot suggested listing everything by release date, and #0 was released after #1 and #2.
 * Put "Notes and references" in a scroll box, although I'm personally not a big fan of them.
 * Templatized the description for Image:Kotorteam.jpg.
 * - Sikon 07:48, 13 September 2007 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/6 Users/11 total)
Support
 * 1) -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 17:58, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 20:02, 15 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 04:18, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  Talk  14:56, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 21:59, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) jSarek 00:50, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) Cull Tremayne 15:28, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) I didn't find a thing wrong with Pic. Brilliant work. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 01:56, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:50, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) Now the other one, please ;-) Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 11)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 23:33, 27 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 2) *I'd like to note that I gave this the copyedit I promised you as I looked at it. Sorry I was late.
 * 3) **Thanks. I forgive you ;)
 * 4) * "The two easily deactivated the droid, but Katarn managed to kill Gorc, who had underestimated the Rebel agent, who killed him easily." - Awkward. Could be broken up, or wording changed.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * "The "twins" moved forward, as the Klatooinian unsuccessfully attempted to release the grip the guards had on him while slowly backing away." - Again, a little awkward.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * "Gorc was dim-witted and slow, so, even though he was the smaller of the two, Pic tried to look out for Gorc's well-being, acting as a sort of "older brother" to his mutated friend." - This as well.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * "If the two were within several meters of each other, their powers were boosted&mdash;however, their closeness also meant that if one brother was injured, the pain was shared to the other, and every time Pic used the Dark Side he further corrupted Gorc, and vice versa." - And this also.
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) * In the last paragraph of Powers and abilities, you practically beatbox the word "Force." Use some innovative alternatives.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * This is merely a request: could just one more image be found?
 * 15) **I have a good image in mind, but I don't have a scanner. I'll try and find someone with the means to scan/upload it on IRC. The picture is from the Dark Forces II instruction manual, about six pages from the end.
 * 16) ***Added, courtesy of Green tentacle. It's not great, but the only other alternative is another screenshot, which would be just as bad.
 * 17) *As is this: could another quote or two be added, to the beginning of the Biography section or the Personality and traits section?
 * 18) **Alas, there doesn't really seem to be any more quotes related to Pic. I'll add one if I come across one, but I doubt I will.
 * 19) * Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 02:18, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) **Thank you for your comments and input. -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 13:01, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) ***No problem. Thanks for honoring me with the request for a copyedit.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 21:59, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) From the beaker of Lord Hydronium:
 * 23) * Something in the BTS about the differences between the game and Dark Force: Rebel Agent (Pic's death, the wampa, etc.).
 * 24) **Addressed.
 * 25) *Speaking of wampas, this page disagrees with the article.
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) *Something in the BTS also about how his name wasn't given in full until the Dark Forces Saga.
 * 28) **Addressed.
 * 29) *And let's make this a BTS hat trick: BTS info from Abel Peña's blog.
 * 30) **Addressed.
 * -- Lord Hydronium 09:29, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your comments and input. -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 13:01, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) * The event of obtaining one of Yoda's lightsabers is not mentioned in the main Bio, or is it explained how Pic switched over to using a lightsaber instead of a dagger. Yoda doesn't even seem to be linked in the main Bio either. Cull Tremayne 13:08, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added, linked and clarified. -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 15:21, 20 September 2007 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Azzameen looking article.Thefourdotelipsis 10:11, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Dang stubs. Cull Tremayne 10:39, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) A lengthy yet worthy read. - Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 04:50, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Bah! Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 03:53, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Because it's Ace. I really, really, really need to finish MK-09. Badly. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 02:51, 27 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 2) * (1.1) "...which only provided temptation for Ace."? What is this supposed to mean?
 * 3) *"hypered" (1.12). Need I say more?
 * 4) *That's all for me. Although I resent the "e-mail" :P. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 03:40, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) So far:
 * 6) * Challenging the Viraxo: "the plan did not work as planned". Sounds like a plan. :P
 * 7) **Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 04:25, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * Preparations at Sullust: 4th and 6th paragraphs repeat each other. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:24, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) **...the hell? Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 04:25, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) And the rest:
 * 11) * Working with the Bothan Spynet: Shouldn't Super-class Star Destroyer be Executor-class or Super Star Destroyer?
 * 12) **Oh, I'm sorry, I'm just going by what it was called in probably 90% of its appearances. My mistake. Thefourdotelipsis 00:01, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Actually, I'd have thought that 90% of its appearances call it a Super Star Destroyer which I'd have no problem with. It was just the "-class" bit I took issue with. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:08, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) *More of a comment than an objection but I'd have thought the mission videos included with the strategy guide depicted the canon version of Ace's actions. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:19, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 15) **Well, I wouldn't be all that sure about that, but at any rate, I think the current level of detail is, well, ideal. I'm not going to write "First he fought the bombers, and he dual-linked his lasers. He remembered to rearm, and set his shields at 25%, and his lasers at 75%..." Thefourdotelipsis 00:01, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) ***I don't want any more detail. What I meant more was that the BTS bit says his exact actions are ambiguous and that it was worth mentioning that the strategy guide may present the canon version of events. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:08, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Yes, that is the best image possible. Thefourdotelipsis 10:11, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Hey, I didn't say anything! - Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 04:50, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * "the capture of Tydirium was of top priority." Something's missing there. -- Ozzel 18:15, 19 September 2007 (UTC)

(4 Inq/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 10:35, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Cull Tremayne 10:39, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Amazing job culling this much info on him from what amounts to a handful of message board posts. Good work. jSarek 04:46, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Not a huge fan of the small paragraphs, but good stuff. Thefourdotelipsis 07:25, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6)  Chack Jadson  Talk  00:53, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) Hmm, slowly making my way through these FAN's :S  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:00, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Ref the affiliations section of the infobox. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:16, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done --Eyrezer 04:49, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Real minor things: Change the caption about the thermal gel, it's too similar to the last sentence of the paragraph next to it. Also, remove the parentheses from "sometime after the Battle of Endor" in the paragraph next to the pic of the gel (about the Moff). And finally, the sentence" Guardsmen were only at half strength, but managed to fool Gunman's squad into thinking they were at full strength via doubler suits," should be rephrased, as it sound repetitive (change the second strength to something similar). Like I said, real quick grammar fixes. Overall it's a very interesting and well-written article.  Chack Jadson  Talk  01:48, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *I changed the caption and the Ailon Guardsmen sentence. I'd like to keep the BoE brackets though as it is one of the few missions that has any kind of dating attached to it. In my mind it adds info, without detracting from the article. --Eyrezer 04:29, 23 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * You should totally put that image of the kidnapped guy in there... :-P Cull Tremayne 10:39, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * BTS? --Eyrezer 04:49, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Are we sure this meets rule 17 :P ? Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:15, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Heh, for sure :) I've written shorter FA's then this! :P Greyman ( Paratus ) 00:27, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 21:21, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 12:58, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 15:08, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  Talk  19:45, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5)  Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 01:19, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) "Siths." Also, it says that he didnt' want to make history, rather, he wanted to make history. This make-a no sense. Thefourdotelipsis 08:07, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Both fixed. -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 12:31, 20 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Some sentences have two references, such as "Ooroo generally spoke basic", and things in the BTS. Is this necessary?  Chack Jadson  Talk  02:05, 21 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *I guess not. Fixed -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 07:14, 21 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 6) * In Battle of Kirrek, "reigned down on the capital" does not make sense.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * In the Legacy section, the part about the pirates and rebels being granted amnesty should not be in the same sentence as Odan-Urr's grief for Ooroo. Reword this somehow.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) *That's all. Good story. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 14:57, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thank you for your comments and input --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 15:16, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 16:22, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  Talk  13:07, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Looks good. Cull Tremayne 16:22, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Great read; very informative, good story. Great pick.&mdash; Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 19:32, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Reworded a few problem spots; otherwise, very good. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 01:42, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Geez, you crazy FA-ers. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) Bah! TOTJ saturation! Thefourdotelipsis 06:25, 27 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) "It's" are used several times when their should be no apostrophe. Also, the sentence, "As his wisdom and knowledge grew, he decided that his experiences newfound abilities would be best used in the teaching of others" in Powers doesn't make sense. Otherwise it's good.  Chack Jadson  Talk  00:21, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Zapped those inappropriate "it's" and reworded that sentence. Thanks Chack :) Greyman ( Paratus ) 04:07, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) RHETORICAL QUESTIONS! Improper prose. Thefourdotelipsis 01:52, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *Heh, fixed :P Greyman ( Paratus ) 03:29, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * OK, I think the little bit where whatisface tells the story about the Sith could be a tad more succinct, and you tell us about Janek and his grandfather twice in the bio. Thefourdotelipsis 08:33, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) *Fixed. Greyman ( Paratus ) 13:59, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) **Bah! Whatever his name was. Andur. Same thing. Thefourdotelipsis 23:02, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Following this confrontation, Chamma felt immense guilt and confusion by the course of events which had transpired on Athiss and decided to go into a self-imposed exile in the deserts of H'ratth. Over the next century he tried to meditate, and then forget his fateful mission which had caused him to fall from the light. reads awkwardly. Can this be broken up a bit or perhaps reworded?
 * 4) *Fixed. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) The whole duel part is very confusing. So first he decides that the Force has abandoned him, so the can't rely on it, or is it that he's only using his anger? When exactly does he fall to the dark side? If he first decided that he couldn't depend on the Force at all, and then later he decided to use the dark side, that should be clarified. As it reads now, I can't really understand what this whole anger/no faith in the Force/using the dark side relationship really is.
 * 6) **Reworded that part, and the article, to reflect what we discussed in IRC. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) In the Tales of the Jedi Companion it is incorrectly stated near the end of Chamma's entry that his life-changing battle with the Sith took place on H'ratth when in fact it actually took place on the planet of Athiss in the Loro Babis system. Why is it incorrect? Because earlier in the book it wasn't on H'ratth? If so, can that be specified? Cull Tremayne 14:50, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) **Clarified. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:28, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) Can the intro be trimmed at all?  Chack Jadson  Talk  18:51, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) *I'm reluctant to slice and dice that intro since it's no where near being too long. It may just look longer than normal because there is no infobox picture, and the infobox information itself is quite sparse. Greyman ( Paratus ) 19:04, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) **All right. It is important information after all.  Chack Jadson  Talk 19:16, 24 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments

Not sure what to vote. It's got lots of sites, but feels a bit ponderous for some reason. Maybe that's just because it hasn't got any images. Unit 8311 16:28, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * There are no images available. He was mentioned only briefly in the comics and then the bulk of his information is provided from the Tales of the Jedi Companion from several entries. Greyman ( Paratus ) 16:37, 22 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Thanks for clarifying that bit on the examples, Greyman. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 01:53, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * No problem, Hobbes :) Greyman ( Paratus ) 02:20, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

(2 Inq/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 03:24, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  Talk  00:35, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 00:39, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) Change the Second Battle of Coruscant links to Battle of Coruscant (Clone Wars). The first paragraph in the Biography section should be rephrased, as it reads a little awkward. Otherwise, pretty good.  Chack Jadson  Talk  13:23, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed, I think. Thefourdotelipsis 08:35, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 4) * Ref the Physical Appearance and Affiliations section of the infobox.
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) * I count four redlinks. Maybe unlink the ones to the Hyperspace users.
 * 7) **Fixed, but the Hyperspace users are the actual authors, so they deserve articles.
 * 8) ***That works, than. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 05:30, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) * No reference for P&T.
 * 10) **Fixed.
 * 11) *Tis' all. I'm liking the shortness of this nom :)... compared to this one. Good job expanding what is essentially a single-source nom to FA quality. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 05:10, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) **Uh...fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 05:26, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) *** :). Thanks. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 05:30, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

(3 Inqs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support Oppose Comments
 * 1)  Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 04:44, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 19:12, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 00:33, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Very interesting.  Chack Jadson  Talk 00:35, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:10, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) " As the Sith Lords departed the Hall, Sylvar was comforted by Nomi and Cay. Her master was no more." - This strikes me as the wrong tone. Also, a few sentences earlier, you call Kun's powers "Impressive". Which strikes me as POV. Thefourdotelipsis 09:11, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Sentences revamped.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 14:24, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) The sentence "It is a true testament to his highly developed dueling skills that Ulic Qel-Droma was able to hold off Sylvar's attacks without having access to the force" in Powers and Abilities seems out of place. I know what you mean, but it sounds like you're talking about Ulic. Rephrase it, and you'll have my support.  Chack Jadson  Talk  19:08, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *Rephrased.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 19:40, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 6) * In the intro, "cruelly" seems like POV to me.
 * 7) **Changed to "mercilessly," which only states that Kun was not showing mercy, and not delving into his intentions.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 13:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) ***That's good. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:43, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) * Also in the intro, can a little more mention be given on Crado's death, and the squabbling and such that took place causing it (i.e. Ambria and Ossus detail)
 * 10) **Sentence added.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 13:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) * And finally, mention Qel-Droma's death in the intro, as it's pretty important in the last part of Sylvar's story.
 * 12) **Sentence added; though it does kill the flow and effect of the intro.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 13:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Hmmm... I guess you're right. If you don't think it should be there, feel free to take it out, cause it does kind of sound better without it.
 * 14) * In the first paragraph of The Great Sith War, was Sylvar on Ossus during these events?
 * 15) **It is not said. She is nowhere to be seen. I wasn't going to make a conjecture statement regarding her whereabouts.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 13:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) ***No problem, then.
 * 17) * "... but someone else did not" (The Trial of Ulic Qel-Droma)? Who?
 * 18) **Master Vodo. Read the first sentence of the next paragraph. It's a stylistic thing.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 13:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 19) *** Yes, I know, but from what I know of TOTJ, Vodo had very little to do with Qel-Droma in that scene, focusing his attention on Kun. It says Cay refused to kill his brother, but someone else did not&mdash; not Kun. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:43, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) ****Clarified, consarnit!&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 12:09, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) *That's all on this one, Graestan. Glad I could get the critique to you before your vacation. And I like the P&A quote. ;) . Much more interesting story than Crado, in my opinion. Good work. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:57, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) **Thanks for your input.&mdash; Graestan [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 13:50, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 23) Could a brief mention of Vodo's attempts to shield Kun with the lightside en route to Deneba be mentioned, and Sylvar's coming to his aid? Other than that, an excellent read; good work.--  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 15:29, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

(2 Inq/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Havac 08:05, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 20:25, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Last paragraph of "First combat". I'm getting a bit of a "Keep your hands off Jimmy!" moment. "Darklighter did this. Darklighter did that. Darklighter with three bags full." Thefourdotelipsis 10:20, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Largely de-Jimmyed. jSarek 10:43, 24 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) The only thing causing me to withhold my support, is the succession box at the bottom at the article&mdash;I'd like to see, at the very least, the dates listed there provided with reference tags. Other than that minor thing, the article is awesome and one your best Havac.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 19:25, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *I actually suggested reffing succession boxes back when we started reffing infoboxes, but was told not to bother. It's something I support anyway, so I'll get on it. Havac 20:03, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) In the "Striking back" section, we're suddenly dealing with a new COS. You might want to mention Fey'lya's death. Also, stuff like "got a goatee" and "dyed hair blonde" is better suited to the P&T, rather than the main bio. Thefourdotelipsis 08:48, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Also, in the section where Leia is apprehended and there's the smelling salts and all that, it's degenerated into a play-by-play. It needs to be more concise and have a more suitable tone. Thefourdotelipsis 09:47, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) *See about that. Havac 17:33, 27 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments

(3 Inqs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:12, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 01:48, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) I reiterate. Holy crap, crazy FA-ers. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:55, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Good job. Despite the fact that I'm tiring of TOTJ, I like Andur and Sylvar's stories a good deal. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:48, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Enough with the TOTJ already! Thefourdotelipsis 10:06, 27 September 2007 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 2) *Is it possible to get an image of Andur's force ghost near the P&A? It doesn't look there's much space, but if it can be done, that might be a good idea.
 * 3) **Eh, added. I didn't add it originally because Andur looks, even more so than usual, like a little girl when he appears as a Force ghost :P Greyman ( Paratus ) 14:20, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Thanks :P. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:48, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) * I have a problem with the P&A. If Andur had already been taught all Chamma could teach him, and Chamma was skilled with the use of a blade and the use of the force, how had none of Andur's powers surfaced? They may not have been mentioned, but it seems to me that he had already finished more than a "small portion" of his training. This might need to be re-written a little; I recognize that none of his abilities appear in actual material, but if he's learned all Chamma can teach, I doubt his lightsaber combat and force skills are dormant within him. I'm not sure how you'd go about writing something so... speculative, I guess, so suggestions are fine.
 * 6) **Clarified. Greyman ( Paratus ) 14:20, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Very good fix. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:48, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * Also, in the P&A, you might want to mention that he could become a force ghost. I know not all Jedi could do this, so... it might deserve a mention.
 * 9) **Added. Greyman ( Paratus ) 14:20, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) *Feel free to argue with me over these last two. No other problems, though. Enough TOTJ already! ;). Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:15, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Long live Tales of the Jedi and the Sunrider clan :) Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:12, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 17:39, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 01:19, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 21:49, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Oh...you know that is indeed Alpha-98 in the picture? Otherwise, good work. Thefourdotelipsis 10:38, 27 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Cull Tremayne 00:57, 28 September 2007 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) No mention of Sheeka being pregnant with his child in the intro? That's definitely an important aspect of Nate's story.  Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 05:25, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed. Greyman ( Paratus ) 13:37, 26 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Since a month or two ago when I promoted it to GA, I have done quite a bit of expansion and cleanup to Alpha-98, in an effort to make it FAN worthy. Also, I thought I would write a non-TOTJ article to give my fellow Inq's a break from all of my recent TOTJ FAN's :P Greyman ( Paratus ) 17:39, 25 September 2007 (UTC)

(1 Inqs/0 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Hey, it's not a character... Cull Tremayne 00:57, 28 September 2007 (UTC)

Object

Comments