Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Fnnbu


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Fnnbu

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:59, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yup.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) He looks suspiciously similar to once unused concept art for the Rancor. Oh, well, one of these days we'll mention it when nominating the Zexx. Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:53, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:41, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) —Tommy  9281 21:07, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) A Christian 00:47, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 20:30, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:06, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farl has been waiting for this one
 * 2) * Intro: "However" used twice in a row in the intro. The first time I don't understand why it's used: The pirates reach Ambria and Thon refuses to fight them, what's the "however" there?
 * 3) **Changed the first one.
 * 4) * Bio: Was Fnnbu a member of Stonebone's crew? You say so but, if so, shouldn't you mention any implication Fnnbu might have had in the ambush to Grunta's ore hauler? At least, you should mention that, chronologically, Fnnbu and the rest of Steonbone's crew raided the hauler, were captured by Bogga, were blackmailed to go to Ambria, and then went to Ambria.
 * 5) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:30, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **Yes he was, but I refrained from mentioning if he took part in the raid on the ore hauler. It is never stated that he was there, and he is never seen while the raid happens. I didn't want to assume anything.
 * 7) Lee attacks
 * 8) * Stonebone's gang has a link. Please link it in the infobox and in the article.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * Jedi apprentice Nomi Sunrider used an exotic Force power called battle meditation. I'm not quite sure if "exotic" is POV.
 * 11) **If you're not quite sure, then why are you objecting? Do you think its POV or not?
 * 12) ***Sorry I worded it badly. Replacing exotic with rare should do it.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 09:38, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) ****I just removed the adjective totally.
 * 14) *Good work.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:26, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) Few things
 * 16) * Can you say who the quote in the Biography section is to? Otherwise the reader has to wait until the end of the article to find out that "cap'n" refers to Stonebone.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) * Also, should the first quote link to Bogga and to enforcers? I'm not sure if this is a valid objection or not if the specific individual isn't known.
 * 19) **I usually don't link to people in quotes, and the guy who said it is linked later in the article (its the guy who finds the crystals).
 * 20) ***Okay. I didn't know that was just a preference thing.
 * 21) * The ensemble was sent by Bogga to retrieve a lost shipment of Adegan crystals from Bogga's sworn enemy, Jedi Master Thon, in exchange for Bogga granting freedom to Stonebone's crew, who had been captured after a failed raid on an Ithullian ore hauler. So were the pirates basically blackmailed by Bogga? I feel this could use it's own sentence to clarify and explain that they weren't there on their own will. Plus, the way it is worded now it sounds like the whole ensemble of pirates and enforcers were going in exchange for their freedom, while I think it's just supposed to be the pirates.
 * 22) **I think its pretty clear that Stonebone's crew is the one getting freedom, not the enforcers as well. And they weren't really blackmailed, Bogga offered them freedom in exchange for a task and Stonebone accepted.
 * 23) *A Christian 18:19, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) The Grand Master
 * 25) * Is a link available for their failed raid? If not, is there enough info on it to create a stub?
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) * Tense shifting in the BTS.
 * 28) **I think its better the way I have it. It is present tense until I get to the sentence about CSWE, where I switch to past tense when I place a date on the CSWE giving him an entry. Its not grammatically correct to say "In 2008, Fnnbu is given an entry" when its in the past.
 * 29) ***Yes, I know 2008 is in the past, but so are 1993 and 1994, and all of the other appearances, for which you have worded in the present. You can easily adjust your wording so that it matches how you worded the first appearances you mentioned, or you can just as easily change the whole BTS to be past-tense. But either way, it should be consistent with tense, and not switch back and forth. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:44, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ****Fine, addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:00, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) * Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:00, May 2, 2010 (UTC)

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