Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Darth Nihilus (second nomination)

Darth Nihilus

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:45, September 17, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I'm dating this project here, but it's a companion to Visas Marr and dedicated to : I'm sorry.

Support

 * Flyn Arc 20px 12:46, September 29, 2012 (UTC)


 * 1) DarthRevan1173 RevanTOR001.jpg (Long live Lord Revan) 13:05, September 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2) Good job. Plagueis327 (talk) 19:57, September 30, 2012 (UTC)

Floyd

 * Intro" "a seeker of such things" What things? Sounds like you could be talking about his affliction or even his body by the way the sentence is worded.
 * "The affliction painfully ravaged his body while rendering him a wound in the Force. He was found by a seeker of these," Did that make it clearer for you? NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 06:01, November 19, 2012 (UTC)
 * Article for Nihilus and Sion defeating Traya?
 * No. They just pummel her. It's not really a duel or a battle. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 06:01, November 19, 2012 (UTC)
 * General linking issues. Go through this article and make sure you've got it all down.
 * Went through. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:29, November 20, 2012 (UTC)
 * Still seeing some errors.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 19:24, December 1, 2012 (UTC)
 * Please point me in the right direction then. Most of the ones I found were ones like flotilla. Maybe you know about articles I don't. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:40, December 1, 2012 (UTC)
 * Intro: "was collected for burial" by whom?
 * The CSWE didn't say. It was an unnecesary explaination for why his holocron could appear in Legacy, I believe. They didn't really think it through. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 06:01, November 19, 2012 (UTC)
 * The image in the first bio section has a blanked text box, which is against policy. Get it re-uploaded.
 * Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:50, November 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * You need to more conclusively identify the "Sith Academy" and the Trayus Academy as one and the same in the bio.
 * Done. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:29, November 20, 2012 (UTC)
 * Fix these and I'll continue.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:59, November 19, 2012 (UTC)
 * Your description of his alliance with Vaklu is only mentioned after you mention Surik's return to Republic space, although it occurred "just before Surik's return to Republic space." It should be completely chronological.
 * Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 02:56, December 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * "inside the tomb of an ancient Dark Lord of the Sith." Who?
 * Added. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 02:56, December 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * Is there a link for "ability to draw on the Force energy of those around her"?
 * I don't think so. Force bond, maybe, but it's not treated as literally as her one with Kreia. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 02:56, December 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * "Nihilus's spirit was able to survive inside his armor, which survived the destruction of the Ravager." Repetition.
 * Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:40, December 1, 2012 (UTC)
 * ". Nihilus was aware of some secret faculties of the dark side such as devastating power, used to increase the intensity of an offensive Force technique either by half of its power or to double its power, and distant power, which gave him the ability to increase the range of a Force power to span a star system." You use the word "power" five times in this one sentence.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 19:24, December 1, 2012 (UTC)
 * Cut the extraneous ones. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:40, December 1, 2012 (UTC)

Comments
This isn't exactly an objection, why I put it here instead of the objections section&mdash;also because I don't know if there is a rule about that in the Wook&mdash;but back when I was writing my school essays and studies we were told never to have only one subheading under another, as there is in Silent sojourn/Encounter with Visas Marr -section. It is a minor point, and as I said I don't know if there is a rule about it here, but I just thought to mention it.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 13:10, September 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * I never noticed that. You're right, it is unnecessary. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 14:55, September 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * Not sure how you want to handle this, but his mask is now an apparently mass-produced item available for sale in the Cartel Market of SWTOR. I think the Cartel Market is supposed to be an in-universe thing; at least the existence of copies of the mask for sale in the SWTOR era is probably worth noting in the article. ~ Savage BOB sig.png 18:54, December 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * I looked it up on swtor.com, then found an explanation elsewhere, and I don't think it's supposed to be canon. The Cartel Market isn't a physical place: it's an icon you can click to access a section where you can buy packs of randomly generated items, increasing in average rarity the higher you pay in Cartel Points, like Pokemon cards. That said, someone who knows about it first hand may be able to tell me otherwise. I'll include a note in the BTS later. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 18:33, December 5, 2012 (UTC)