Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Lotho Minor

Lotho Minor

 * Nominated by: Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 21:56, May 8, 2017 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A more substantial planet nom than what I usually write.

Support

 * 1) Sol Pacificus Firestorm 19:56, May 24, 2017 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

 * I feel like the word "refuse," as fancy as it is, is used too frequently during the "History" section. Maybe use synonyms for one or two of them to diversify the language. That's all I can see for now. MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 03:45, May 9, 2017 (UTC)
 * Fixed. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 14:59, May 9, 2017 (UTC)

Sol Pacificus

 * "His driving desire to cling to life caused Maul to rebuild himself with spider-like legs in place of his severed ones, living in hiding in the caves beneath Lotho Minor's surface and subsisting off trash and vermin for over a decade."
 * A little confused over why, in trying not to overuse pronouns in this sentence, the proper noun "Maul" is used in place of the second instance of the pronoun not the first. That is, why isn't it "Maul's driving desire to cling to life caused him to rebuild himself..." instead. I think the way it is worded now causes the initial "his" to implicitly mean that it refers to someone other than Maul, even if it's obvious it doesn't. Now personally, given that the subject Maul was just introduced in the previous sentence, I think it's entirely appropriate (even preferable) to just use only pronouns in this sentence, but if you disagree, then I think it should be "Maul's driving desire to cling to life caused him..." instead. In the Legends version, I actually changed "caused" to "pushed" because I somehow think "caused" is too weighty here somehow, like it doesn't capture the meaning precisely, but you don't have to do this if you disagree with it. Sol Pacificus Firestorm 01:40, May 15, 2017 (UTC)


 * Done. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 16:25, May 24, 2017 (UTC)
 * "Lotho Minor's role as a galactic dumping ground did not encourage any deep exploration of Junker culture or biology, nor did their violent territoriality."
 * Do you think it would be better to replace "did not encourage" with "discouraged"? I think the difference is that the former implies that Lotho Minor's role as a galactic dumping ground & the Junker's violent territoriality should encourage deep exploration of their culture, and yet somehow they don't for whatever reason aside. Replacing it with "discouraged" would mean that it is because Lotho Minor is a junkyard and the Junkers are territorial and violent that deep exploration is avoided. Sol Pacificus Firestorm 01:40, May 15, 2017 (UTC)


 * And done. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 16:25, May 24, 2017 (UTC)

Imperators II

 * The fact that the atmosphere was Type I is infobox-exclusive.
 * Regarding both the infobox and the article's body, you should specify what species the atmosphere was breathable for.
 * The Encyclopedia link backups redirect to the Databank.
 * This has been a common problem with the Encyxlopedia backup links for a while now. I've tried talking to admins about it but haven't got anywhere. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 08:52, June 3, 2017 (UTC)
 * If Lotho Minor is not mentioned in Galactic Atlas, you should explain in the reference(s) how can the events described in the article be dated to 32 and 20 BBY.
 * How do you feel about creating a canon version of the dismemberment article to be linked to from "severed"?
 * Probably a good idea, but it would be just a stub. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 08:52, June 3, 2017 (UTC)
 * Is there any article at all for this "mystical talisman"?
 * That would be the Talisman of Finding in Legends, but I'm sure there's a more simple name floating around it an episode guide or on a piece of concept art I could use to create a canon page. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 08:52, June 3, 2017 (UTC)
 * "He lured Opress into a cave" - any reason why you used "lured" here instead of just "brought"? Did Morley had a hidden agenda?
 * Yes, he lured prey there for Maul. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 08:52, June 3, 2017 (UTC)
 * You should add the "Witches of the Mist" allusion (the 1stm) in the BTS.
 * Can you add a backup link to the Amazon template?
 * Care to create Category:Lotho Minor locations?  Imperators II (Talk) 10:52, May 25, 2017 (UTC)
 * Done. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 09:52, June 3, 2017 (UTC)

Comments

 * Sorry objections are taking so long; currently traveling and internet access is spotty. - Imperial Information Office.svg  AV-6R7  Crew Pit 19:40, June 6, 2017 (UTC)