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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
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 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks and none in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
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 * 10) &hellip;not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
 * 11) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 12) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 13) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 14) &hellip;include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "powers and abilities" section on all relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of good quality if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
 * 18) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

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 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
 * 2) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 3) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 4) The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
 * 5) Also, if, at least a week after the article's nomination, that article has 5 Inquisitor supports and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), it will be added to the queue, and will be officially known as a "featured article."
 * 6) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.

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Also remember to add FAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterwards, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under! Failure to do so will result in your objection being considered invalid.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once the article has five supporting Inquisitor votes and no outstanding objections after at least a week, the article will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article." Although articles do not need regular users' votes to pass, non-Inquisitors are encouraged to review articles and participate in the process.
 * 6) Per Inquisitorius consensus, no Inquisitor may use their Inqvote on their own nominations.

Every Sunday and Thursday the next article in the queue will be highlighted on the Main Page as featured, marked with the Featured template and removed from the list of nominations. The beginning of the article then appears on the Main Page via the Featured article template. Nominations that are inactive with outstanding objections for a month will be eliminated from the nominations list by the Inquisitorius.

Derek Klivian

 * Nomination by: - Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My other summer nom. Image replacement by Red is ongoing. Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/0 users/2 total)
Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 00:22, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Hugetastic. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:24, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * The SOTE section doesn't seem to mention Klivian specifically at all. Does something specifically say he was present there? There seems to be a few areas where you mention the Rogues as a group and not Klivian as an individual, and the same question applies. If he's not, then I think it might be just a bit too much of a stretch, especially when you're committing that level of detail. "Organa" is rather abruptly re-introduced in the Mission to Mrlsst section - this should probably be tweaked. And I'm counting 5 redlinks. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Redlinks reduced within acceptable limits. Leia reintroduced. The Rogues thing is a general "We know he was in the squadron at this time, we know the full squadron was here, ergo he was here, though we'll keep it fairly generic." Havac 04:51, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Right. I get what you're saying, but since nothing is explicitly stating that he was there, I think that at least the SOTE section could but cut down. Thefourdotelipsis 23:43, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just a suggestion: Couldn't you get some better images for the Darklighter section? At the moment, it's just various headshots of him, or him lying in bed...I think that panels of him actually doing something would illustrate the article much better. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

Sirak

 * Nominated by: -- Darth Xadún 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A double-bladed lightsaber-wielding Zabrak? How original&hellip;from WP:NSW

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Much improved.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:11, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 05:59, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 06:39, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 13:26, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:26, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

Object Remove nomination (Inquisitorius vote only)
 * 1) BtS needs sourcing. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:14, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) * Adjudsted so that the Bts is sourced within the paragraph. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 21:33, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **It's still not sourced. "Karpyshyn has acknowledged this error, and requested that readers consider Vaapad to read Juyo instead" isn't self-sourcing. Neither is the info about Mace creating Vaapad. You need a ref note with the specific blog link, and possibly another one about the creation of Vaapad. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:58, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***It should be good now. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Jaina Solo: 
 * 6) * "He was rumored amongst some of the apprentices that Sirak had begun training under the Korriban Academy's Headmaster, Qordis, some twenty years before."--Reword and expand.
 * 7) **Addressed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * "During his time at the Academy, Sirak rose through the throng of students to become the top apprentice there. He won the admiration of two fellow Zabraks within the Academy, the twins Yevra and Llokay, though he was by far their superior in skill. The two apprentices followed Sirak constantly, giving the appearance of obedient servants following their master. Compared to the other students, his power was so great that several apprentices believed Sirak was the Sith'ari, an embodiment of the dark side itself."--POV; please reword.
 * 9) **Addressed above, I believe. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * "Academy/academy"--Please choose one.
 * 11) **Addressed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:11, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * "Furious and desperate for vengeance, Sirak plotted ways of killing Bane. His opportunity presented itself when Githany, a deserter of the Jedi Order and Bane's other secret teacher alongside Kas'im, sought Sirak out to kill Bane. Along with his Zabrak kin Llokay and Yevra, he waited in the library while Githany lured Bane to them. However, Githany had also betrayed the Zabrak trio, furnishing Bane with his lightsaber to defend himself. The former Jedi killed the twin Zabrak with her lightwhip, and Bane decapitated Sirak even as he begged for mercy.”--This could be reworded to make the paragraph flow better.
 * 13) **Addressed, I believe. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Although there were other apprentices who used this style of saber…"—Style of saber?
 * 15) **Addressed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:11, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * "Bane had spent much time in his secret training learning the techniques of the double-bladed saber that both Sirak and Kas'im wielded, seeking to understand it and so nullify it's advantage of being unfamiliar to most students." Sounds confusing; please reword.
 * 17) **Addressed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * In the last paragraph of Rivalry with Bane, you use "seeking" twice.
 * 19) **Addressed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:11, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * "All the apprentices were granted the title of Dark Lord of the Sith, declared equal in the Brotherhood, and furnished with their own lightsabers.” Isn’t there a word missing here?
 * 21) **Addressed, I believe. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:11, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * ”He was the most powerful of the three Zabrak studying at the Academy during the end of the New Sith Wars."—POV
 * 23) **The book does describe him as the strongest of the three. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:52, 21 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) ***That's still POV, as worded. If you say that he was deemed to be, was considered as, or believed himself as the most powerful, that's NPOV. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:31, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) ****Should be good now. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 05:39, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) *Tense issues in BtS. -- Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 23:50, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) **Addressed. Thank you for the read, Jaina. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:28, 20 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) The introduction's triple paragraphs are disproportionate to the size of the article itself. It could be cut back by one paragraph. "Although there were other apprentices who used this type of saber, Sirak's the student Bane noted it was only Sirak that wielded the weapon with any kind of skill, apart from the Twi'lek Blademaster of the Academy, Kas'im." - I'm aware that this is some kind of mistake, I'm just not sure what it should be. Thefourdotelipsis 09:15, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) *The second part of this objection seems to have been rectified at some point. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 23:37, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) Most of the "real-life" parts of the BtS should be in present tense. E.g. "this is his only canonical appearance to date," etc. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:07, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) *Addressed. Thank you for the review, AdmirableAckbar. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:57, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1)  Objection left unaddressed for over a month. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:08, 19 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) If Xadun decides to return, I'll have no problem striking this, but move it or lose it otherwise. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:03, 19 October 2008 (UTC)

Do not remove nomination (Inquisitorius vote only) Comments
 * 1) Tommy appears to have taken it over and made some work on it.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:31, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I hope you don't misunderstand our colleagues' "move it or lose it" message as conveyed by removal votes. I almost voted to remove this one, too, until I saw it had been worked on since the vote began. Graestan ( Talk ) 03:36, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **No, of course not. I was contemplating voting with them as well, when I saw Tommy's note. I decided to wait a few days to see if any objections were addressed, and since they were, I figured I would set up the "don't remove nom" vote just to make sure people were aware that it was no longer lying dormant. I have no problems with moving idle noms off the FAN page. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:48, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) If Tommy has agreed to take it over, then I see no reason to remove it.  Greyman ( Talk ) 15:08, 15 November 2008 (UTC)


 * I will take over his noms n his absence. Please give a little time to begin fully addressing the objections. Thank you. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 18:57, 19 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Several objections have been addressed, but the objector has not stricken despite attempts made to contact them. Please advise on a course of action. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 23:37, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'd reconsider using the term "coup dé grâce", just because it borders on POV language. Cull Tremayne 06:39, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Addressed. Thank you for the review, Cull. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:52, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

Kopecz

 * Nominated by: -- Darth Xadún 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: The natural counterpart to Kas'im. Again, WP:NSW

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 05:35, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 12:37, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 13:58, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) It's likely missing info from the Official Star Wars Fact File in relation to his early life. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:15, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Neither my partner or I has access to the fact file, so if you can provide it, we'd both be greatly appreciative. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 14:41, 10 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **I don't either, unfortunately; you might want to ask Jaymach or Cav or anyone else with access to them. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:16, 15 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***After obtaining the Fact File, it has been determined that there is no new info. It says pretty much the same things as PoD does. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 13:56, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Fair enough. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:58, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 7) * The Quote attribution is a little unclear in "The Brotherhood of Darkness" section.
 * 8) **Addressed.
 * 9) * The opening paragraph of the bio needs a bit more context. When did he live, what species he was, what his homeworld was etc. It starts off with him leaving the Jedi Order but it should start with him leaving Ryloth and becoming a Jedi in the first place.
 * 10) **Addressed, I believe.
 * 11) * "attempting to establish a system with numerous Dark Lords" &mdash; bit of context on the significance of this, please. What was a Dark Lord and how was Kaan's approach different?
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * "Together, the three Sith planned the Battle of Korriban&mdash;after the Brotherhood re-took the ancient Sith homeworld..." &mdash; this also needs context and to be properly explained. As is it seems to be assuming the reader is already familiar with the information. They planned the battle; who actually fought in it? Did Kopecz? Re-took the Sith homeworld from whom? Etc.
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * "Kopecz, however, remained with Kaan to continue the war against the Galactic Republic." &mdash; again, context is needed here. This is the first mention of a war with the Republic, and if Kopecz is "continuing" the battle then he'd have to already been participating, but that's not been mentioned before in the bio. This stuff could easily go with the first paragraph.
 * 16) **I believe this too has been addressed through handling of previous objections.
 * 17) *The stuff about the Battle of Ulahore needs some changes; it's not presented in chronological order at present. The outcome of the battle isn't mentioned, either. I'm also not sure if the stuff about Bane establishing the Rule of Two at a later point is really appropriate, but it's up to you if you want to keep it.
 * 18) **That section talks about Ulabore (a person), not Ulahore. The battle mentioned at this point is at Phaseera. Also, I removed the bit about Bane and the RoT, which I agree, isn't really appropriate here.
 * 19) ***It's still not in chronological order.
 * 20) ****It should be good now.
 * 21) *"was like he had his teeth on their throats" -- please reword to read less colloquially.
 * 22) **Addressed.
 * 23) ***That doesn't really make any difference.
 * 24) ****It should be good now.
 * 25) * "Kopecz then mounted his flyer and took off for the battle, which seemed would result in a victory for the Sith." -- this reads awkwardly at best "which seemed would;" also, seemed to whom?
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) * We jump from the third battle to the sixth quite suddenly. Some mention that the Sith and Republic remained in war for several battles/X amount of time would be prudent.
 * 28) **It should be good now.
 * 29) * "Following their defeat, Kopecz joined the remaining members of the Brotherhood in a network of caves at Kaan's order. He explained to Githany and Darovit that Kaan intended to use the thought bomb to defeat the Jedi, at which Githany chose to flee, taking Darovit with her." &mdash; again, this makes little to no sense for those who aren't familiar with the topic/source material. Who's Darovit? You've already mentioned Githany before but another mention of who she is wouldn't go amiss. What's a thought bomb, what's the significance of it, and why did Githany want to flee? Also, you need to mention Kopecz finding out about it before he tells anyone.
 * 30) **Addressed all points, I believe.
 * 31) ***Very good, but it's still a little hazy what exactly a thought bomb is.
 * 32) ****It should be good now.
 * 33) * "Kopecz was committed to joining Kaan and the others, swept up in Kaan's manipulation through the Force" needs some clarification.
 * 34) **Addressed.
 * 35) * The "Thought bomb" and "Last stand" sections are both extremely short and should be merged/resectioned.
 * 36) **Addressed.
 * 37) * Context on the defenders of the caves, please. Also, explain that the Seventh Battle of Ruusan is -- presumably -- the battle in the caves; it's not all that clear and jumps fairly suddenly. Farfalla's also introduced rather suddenly; please amend.
 * 38) **Addressed.
 * 39) * BtS: mention his appearance in PoD and how it expanded his backstory yada yada before moving on to the eye colour. Also, why is the Galactic Campaign Guide info not in the bio. It should be.
 * 40) **Decent read, but remember that you're writing a character biography, not a summary of the comics. Also note that the majority of the readers won't be familiar with the source material so explain and contextify things fully. Lastly, Bane has obviously never seen Orn Free Taa. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:58, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) ***I don't get the Orn Free Taa part, but the rest of the objection has been addressed. Thank you for the review, Ackbar. If anything else is required, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:27, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) Do we know which Fact File issue and article he is in? --Eyrezer 23:40, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) *Addressed.
 * 44) I think the paragraphs describing his leaving the cave with the Force bomb need to be reviewed for factual accuracy. --Eyrezer 23:40, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) *Addressed, I believe, while addressing Ackbar's comments above. Let me know if further maintenance is required, Eyrezer. Thank you. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:27, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 47) * Intro mentions that Farfalla recognized and tried to redeem him. Biography just says he refused to surrender.
 * 48) **Addessed.
 * 49) * "Comprehending that by this time the Jedi would have surrounded the caves&mdash;and that his death was not inevitable&mdash;Kopecz decided to join the Sith warriors who were ordered to defend the caves and fight with them." This took a couple of reads. How being surrounded by the enemy doesn't mean inevitable death could be clearer. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:09, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, GT. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:46, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Many thanks to Cavalier One for providing the Fact File for me. Like Xadún's others, I will be taking this one over as well in his absence. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 13:56, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Still working on outstanding objections. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 23:37, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

Raid on the Iziz Royal Palace

 * Nominated by: -- Tommy9281 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: Damsel in distress.

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) So that's where you've been lately...  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 23:42, 2 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the physics homework Chack Jadson is not doing right now:
 * 2) * Bit too much PBP in intro
 * 3) **Really? I left out maaad details in the intro. Care to assist? —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:48, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Just "As Ulic Qel-Droma stepped forward to offer the protection of both the Galactic Republic and the Jedi Order to the Queen". I feel that this could be rephrased a tad. I dislike the "stepped forward" bit.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:31, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * "For 400 years" Is this an exact date? if so, link.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * Your " seem to be off in the quotes (no spaces are necessary).
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * "Sounds of blaster fire could be heard in the background as Novar answered the comlink from the defense towers." A bit too flowery.
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) * "Ulic Qel-Droma arrived at that same moment with proud stories of how the Riders he had engaged in battle met their demise, but was quickly silenced by the sight a distressed Amanoa." I don't think this is necessary.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * "laughing ominously at the young, novice Jedi, awaiting their return." Same thing; I'd say this is unneeded.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) * "Veitch also used as the first official mission of his new characters Ulic and Cay Qel-Droma, and Tott Doneeta". Is a word missing?
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) *Very nice Tommy. You've come a long way. I'm impressed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:08, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Iziz Royal Palace.JPG and Image:PoorAmanoa.JPG are very low quality. Re-scan 'em. --Imperialles 10:20, 14 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Addressed the first one, working on the second one. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 12:45, 16 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **The second one has also been addressed. Many thanks to JMAS, for the clean images. If still unsatisfactory, Imp, please advise, and I'll rectify. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 01:11, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * The part where Jeth tells his apprentices of Onderon's history should be presented earlier in the piece, and not as something that Jeth speaks of, to remove that point of view aspect. Actually, that problem runs throughout the article, as you're telling this from the perspective of the Jedi. A more objective view would be desirable, where you wouldn't have to reveal what and who people are - just say who and what they are as soon as they appear. You should also talk about why Kira and Gobee are performing the raid, etc. Thefourdotelipsis 02:43, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ** Still working on this, Fourdot. Should be good now, Fourdot. Please advise if more is required. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:46, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***The problem still exists, since you "reveal" Kira and Gobee. "The Commandos, who were actually Beast-Lord Oron Kira and his second-in-command Gobee, easily dispatched the Protectors, and stormed the room where the Queen and her daughter were sequestered." - This should not be, and the characters should be introduced in the prelude section. Thefourdotelipsis 22:10, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ****Should be good now, Fourdot. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 08:49, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 8) *Conjectural title? Additionally, and this isn't really a steadfast objection, but it looks odd having the article title at "Raid on the Iziz Royal Palace" and the bolded bit reading "Royal Palace of Iziz." I'd suggest swapping the "Royal Palace of Iziz" with the "Iziz Royal Palace" later on in the sentence for consistency.
 * 9) **Conjecture tag added, sentence swapped around. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:18, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *In the intro, it should state that the Jedi were trailed, then fired upon by the Beast Riders in chronological order. Additionally, the "arrival" should be clarified to state where they arrived to, since the last thing mentioned was the peace negotiations, but they hadn't actually arrived there yet.
 * 11) **addressed.
 * 12) *The intro needs a bit of reworking. The article's about the raid on the palace, not the Jedi's role in everything; if anything, the POV should be leaning towards the Beast Riders. As is, it reads like a summary, and only really four lines of it describe the actual raid itself. Also, "the Queen demanded that Ulic Qel-Droma and his companions have the Princess returned to her&mdash;at once" seems a little dramatic.
 * 13) **Addressed, I believe.
 * 14) *The "background" section should really start with a date rather than the "for four hundred years." "Between [approximately] whenever and whenever" would probably be better.
 * 15) **Fixed. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:18, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *"As a test of their Jedi knighthood" reads a little awkwardly.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) *Per 4dot above on Jeth's brief. To be honest I don't think it's particularly relevant at all and would prefer to see it go completely, but if it has to stay it should be presented in chronological order.
 * 19) *"When the Nebulon Ranger entered the skies of Onderon, it was immediately set upon by what seemed to be a flock of giant birds flying in their path. After closer scrutiny, Tott Doneeta realized that what was thought to be birds were actually Beast Riders, determined on preventing the Jedi from reaching Iziz." Again, this is written completely from the POV of the Jedi and reads like a plot summary, which it shouldn't.
 * 20) **Addressed.
 * 21) *The Prelude section just reads like a summary of what's gone before the raid; while this is somewhat necessary and not a bad thing, there's no actual prelude for the raid itself. E.g. no planning, conception, nothing on the part of the Beast Riders.
 * 22) *Same problems re:POV with the "attack on the palace" subsection, and most of the first paragraph should be in the prelude section. And with "Galia's abduction" and per 4dot on the introduction of Kira and Gobee and the mention of the raid's purpose.
 * 23) *The stuff about Veitch using the event for whatever purpose should come before the audio drama, unless its referring to that. If it is it's at least partially inaccurate since John Whitman wrote the actual scripts. Also, why does the ref note in the BtS link to Star Wars: Tales of the Jedi ?
 * 24) **Aside from a number of spelling errors and the like, this is a good article&mdash;however, it has a long way to go before it's more than simply a summary of the comic. Also, while normally I don't have a problem with it, passive voice is really overused in it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:04, 27 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Chack, was this supposed to be for the Raid on the Royal Palace article? If so, I've addressed each as you have stated. Thanks for the review! —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:54, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Heh, yeah. Thanks.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:00, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I am still working on this. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Battle of Iziz (Beast Wars)

 * Nominated by: -- Tommy9281 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: WP:TOTJ will never die!

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 * 1)  Greyman ( Talk ) 05:04, 8 October 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From Greyman:
 * 2) * Like I mentioned to you in #WP:TotJ the other day, that intro needs to be taken to the butcher shop and sliced-and-diced by quite a bit :P From giving it a quick glance over, everything else appears in order -- I'll give 'er a more thorough read within the coming days, Tommy :) Greyman ( Talk ) 13:41, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, and if there is anything else required, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:01, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) The audio drama is an adaptation, not an alternate and conflicting source. There really is no need for a template; a mention in the BtS is sufficient. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:04, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I hate that template anyway. Removed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:47, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) **Given the precedent you set by removing the templates on Gobee's now-Featured article I have reverted the removal. I'm not sure either way but consistency is important. Please try and address this/you may want to open up a CT or whatever. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:04, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Ultimately, this has the same problem as the Raid on Iziz article, in that events are told exclusively from the perspective of the comic. Particular trouble spots are the revelation of the raid's intent, and Jeth's reason for coming to Onderon. This needs to be revised. Oron Kira only needs to be referred to as "Kira" after being introduced. In general, the prelude section could probably be slimmed down a touch, only to what is directly relevant to the battle. Thefourdotelipsis 09:14, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Dedicated to my young friend Master Ooroo, who originally undertook this endeavour with me. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:01, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I am still working on this. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

First Duel in the Iron Citadel

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 14:05, 26 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Naturally, in the spirit of Wookieeproject TOTJ.

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 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 23:02, 28 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 08:56, 21 November 2008 (UTC)

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Lobar Aybock

 * Nominated by: —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:17, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Be easy, it's my first FA nom ;) —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:10, 7 November 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) Cull Tremayne 08:36, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I think the BtS could be expanded a little to mention that some factors in his life such as shockboxing and Tull Raine and his species and homeworld came from other sources initially. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:22, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I received some information from the author and tried to expand it a bit. Let me know what you think. —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:48, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Looks good. I created an "interview" subpage and copied Caledre's message on your talk page there to use as a ref note, which I think is the best way to source it. One thing you might want to do is mention that Calians and Shiva IV were references to Marvel, but other than that it looks good. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:28, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***You can move that to the WP:INT main page if it's not already there for purposes of organization and categorization. ;) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:19, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 6) * Contextify Cus in the intro.
 * 7) **Should be better now.
 * 8) * If he was not a shockboxer before his capture, that should be clarified in intro.
 * 9) **I think fixing the first fixed this, too.
 * 10) *The "bombing of his hometown" might need a battle link.
 * 11) **Does somebody more familiar with the Marvel stories want to write a battle article?
 * 12) * The early life section just doesn't flow well. See what you can do about making the sentences transition to each other a little better.
 * 13) **Hopefully if flows smoothly now.
 * 14) * Is it "shockboxing" or "shocboxing"? I've seen both.
 * 15) **Shockboxing. Fixed.
 * 16) * Contextify who the Rust Rats are and why they are important. It's not clear in the article what their relationship is with Aybock.
 * 17) * hub-buster should be linked.
 * 18) **Done. Now I'll have to write another article to fix redlinks.
 * 19) *I also feel P&T could be beefed a little more.
 * 20) **Beefed. —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:04, 9 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *Fascinating BtS. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:18, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Gracias. Thanks for the review. —Xwing328 (Talk) 17:45, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) Can we get that Tull Raine pic cropped to remove the border? --Eyrezer 20:22, 9 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) *Done. —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:04, 9 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) Could we get a mention of Aybock's condition of a fair fight in the bio? I know you mention it in the P&T but I think it would also be appropriate to mention it earlier. --Eyrezer 23:59, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) Stitchy should be introduced much earlier in the piece, and that whole scene should be reworked just a tad, to explain just why they were "forced" to set in a crowded speedervan. Perhaps a little more detail on just how the fight pans out would be good as well. Also, 4 redlinks. Thefourdotelipsis 02:33, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) "which endured a constant state of war between the Calian Confederacy and the Twelve Tribes of T'Syriél,[4] involving many Calians in continuous battles between the native belligerent species, including Lobar Aybock's father." The wording of the native belligerent species is a bit off. Can you reword it? --Eyrezer 22:39, 3 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Currently 6 redlinks: these should be taken care of within a day or two. The word count is approximately 1,200. And no, there are no images that can be used; they're all from Hyperspace. —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:17, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, one of the Hyperspace images was on the SW.com main page for a time, so you could probably use that. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:22, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I added a crop of the one used to promote the story. Also, the artist posted the illustrations on Deviant Art, but I doubt that would be considered fair use to get a better picture from there, since they're technically Hyperspace images. —Xwing328 (Talk) 19:40, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm pretty sure we have precedent for doing that with Trevas's stuff. Once it's in the wild, it's fair game. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:14, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * At any rate, the image of Aybock running should be used in his infobox, since it was used on the main page of SW.com and is, therefore, fair game. The current image should then replace the existing (and a tad confusing) one of Raine over a defeated opponent. Thefourdotelipsis 02:33, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Just a note, I will get back to address these soon, but I've been very busy recently and am about to go out of town. —Xwing328 (Talk) 05:28, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

Orrimaarko

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:27, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 08:23, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:55, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:40, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Cull Tremayne 05:54, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Who is "he" here? Orrimaarko or our Human friend? "Pulling out his miniature, double-barreled weapon, he felled the two scout troopers"
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * I believe he did graduate from the Academy, though I could be mistaken: "Orrimaarko was disgusted that Solo, a man who hadn't made it through the Imperial Academy"
 * 5) **I was going by EGtAS, but yeah, you're correct; I've reworded it accordingly.
 * 6) * How, specifically, did Heir dispel this theory? "but the release of Timothy Zahn's Heir to the Empire in 1991 dispelled that theory."
 * 7) **Specified.
 * 8) * I feel some kind of Rebellion information should be presented here, even if only as a BTS bit. Maybe some kind of time context can be given - 0 ABY - for some of his Alliance duties?
 * 9) **Added a BtS mention; not really sure what else I can do with it.
 * 10) * Please order the Source list by correct date. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:24, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Done. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:03, 27 November 2008 (UTC)

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Raskta Lsu

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 19:15, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Quite the definition of a "ride-or-die" chick.

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 * 1) Can't say I'm not tired of this subject, but a good job once again. :P Cull Tremayne 16:50, 22 November 2008 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Too much PBP in the last body paragraph.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:29, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Yeah, I was figuring that when I was writing it. I'll change it up soon. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *Addressed.
 * 4) You don't need to refer to Sarro Xaj as "Sarro Xaj" all the time (unless there's some really good reason. :P) Thefourdotelipsis 01:15, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *Addressed. Thank you Chack and Fourdot for the reviews. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 05:37, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm down for whatever needs to be done. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 19:15, 15 November 2008 (UTC)

Yoxgit

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 02:30, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "You're not an assassin." "Look again."

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:48, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:39, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 05:57, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * Changed the OOU Rebellion era link to Galactic Civil War. You can change it to something else, as long as it stays IU. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:39, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Mils Giel

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:04, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "By Gad, sir, you are a character. There's never any telling what you'll say or do next, except that it's bound to be something astonishing."

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 * If the Beheboth stuff confuses you, join the club. :P Thefourdotelipsis 13:04, 18 November 2008 (UTC)

Mohs

 * Nominated by: Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Pure Lando Calrissian Trilogy pyramid-power crack. Check your laws of physics at the door - you're in for a wild, wild ride.

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 * 1) Had no trouble with this when it was up for GA. Cull Tremayne 09:52, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * There's got to be some sort of award for "most consistently traitorous sidekick". Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Dannl Faytonni

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 06:10, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Thank you Pablo.

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:07, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Objections addressed in IRC.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:38, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:24, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Cull Tremayne 00:48, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) Image:Faytonni.jpg is very blurry.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:07, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *It's now as good as humanly possible, unless someone from Lucasfilm decides to publish a version nicer than the 1080i release of the film. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 19:48, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) "Dannl Faytonni had initially dreamed of serving as an officer in the Republic&hellip;" Shouldn't that be "in the Republic's Judicial Department or something. Officer in the Republic is rather unspecific. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:57, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *So is the source, I'm afraid. Thefourdotelipsis 23:34, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **Fair enough. Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:24, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Which Fact File is he referenced in? 44 and 96 both cover the Outlander Club. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:43, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

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Swokes Swokes

 * Nominated by: SavageBob 12:20, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I'll flay strips of flesh from my body if it means this article gets featured.

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Aarrba

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 08:28, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guest nom for WP:TOTJ.

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 * I now understand why this was not done already. :| Thefourdotelipsis 08:28, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I think you could add a quote for P&T, and a better main one.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:35, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the suggestion, Chack. Unfortunately, it's not a legitimate objection, but I'd be more than willing to consider it coming from the comments section. :) Thefourdotelipsis 09:47, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Moved it to there. Now how about it?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:15, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Got a quote in the P/T, but I kinda like the lead. Thefourdotelipsis 05:28, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Pello Scrambas

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 09:47, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Wuhtee-ess.

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 * 1) ChackProject read all WTS noms continues!  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:07, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

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Hoggon

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guest nom for WP:TOTJ.

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:12, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 16:34, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) I think a little bit of context in the last paragraph of the body would be good. Stuff about why Sylvar couldn't kill him, and why she was mad when Hoggon shot Ulic. I know that's not directly pertinent to Hoggon, but it could be a bit confusing if one has not read TOTJ.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:22, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I've added a little bit of context there. Don't want to stray too far from the story at hand, but let me know if it's still confusing. Thefourdotelipsis 05:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Omnibuses aren't exactly scanner friendly, so if anyone could oblige, it would be much appreciated. On the subject of quotes, the one required one is there&mdash;if people want more, please, feel free to add them. Anything, anywhere. Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 22 November 2008 (UTC)

Lando Calrissian

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:35, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: From the two directors that brought you Tales of the Jedi and Wraith Squadron! From the project behind Jaina Solo! From the minds behind Mara Jade Skywalker, an action-packed adventure filled with suspense, betrayal, romance, and, of course, inimitable charm. Now playing: The smoothest FAN ever to grace this page, Lando Calrissian!

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 * 1) As co-nominator. Greyman ( Talk ) 20:45, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

I dare object to Lando
 * 1) No info whatsoever from Lando Calrissian: Idiot's Array and Crisis on Cloud City. Not smooth. Thefourdotelipsis 03:04, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The latter has been addressed; I've asked Borsk about the former. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Former is also addressed now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ditto Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin. - Lord Hydronium 03:10, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I've went ahead and added a sentence or two of some background information for this objection. I looked over my copy of the source again and couldn't see anything new beyond the sentences I just added. Is there something specific you're thinking of that I could work in? Greyman ( Talk ) 13:51, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ** There's some other bits on pages 50, 76, and 88. - Lord Hydronium 08:27, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Information added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * The mentions of Ymile are rather confusingly arranged. There's a picture of her near where Lando wins the bet with Raynor, but no reference to her in the text, then much later in the article it mentions she helped Lando win. That second part should be noted and clarified at the time it actually occurs; also, she should be linked there, since she isn't at the moment. - Lord Hydronium 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Succession box should include Treece; Action Tidings and the Cloud City Databank entry both say he was the Administrator of Cloud City. - Lord Hydronium 00:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fixed the Ymile bits and buffed Lady Luck overall. Also, adjusted succession box, reffed from the actual Marvel comics though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:15, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Information missing on how Lando got back Cloud City, from The New Essential Guide to Characters. Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds not in; amongst the things to add is a bit in there about how Lando raised Tibanna profits that's also in the NEC. - Lord Hydronium 07:29, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **The Tibanna profits bit is already in there, just referenced from another source. The Cloud City re-taking has been added. Still working on GATOW. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Oh, I see; I was searching for "percent". - Lord Hydronium 19:52, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * More NEGTC tidbits: Lando giving control of Cloud City to the Ugnaughts after Zorba cedes it. Lando refusing to go to Chewbacca's funeral out of guilt. From GG3: Lobot convinced Lando to help Leia and the group. - Lord Hydronium 07:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **All of the above fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) Gah, redlinks in source list, mine Databank and Wizards. Those first two totally slipped me mind.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *Red links busted. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:56, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *Databank has been mined and source list updated. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:32, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) Infobox not fully/correctly sourced.  Graestan ( Talk ) 04:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *I think I got the missing reference. If you desire other sourcing, please let me know. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:22, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) **Got it on the second try. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) I'd like to take Yrf's comment below and turn it into an actual objection; for instance, I know there are quotes to be had by or about Lando and/or what he was up to at the time for the LCA, TTT, and BFC. Ideally, since the sections are so long, each should probably have a quote.  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:48, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) *All sections now have quotes except three tiny sections in the "Non-canon appearances" section in the BtS since quotes do not exist for those parts. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:32, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **Hope you found at least one funny one from LCA. ;) Graestan ( Talk ) 23:12, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not a formal objection, but there's space for a lot more quotes in the article. Yrfeloran 04:13, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Villian Dance

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:08, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ChackProject Death Star continues. And I got another up my sleeve, so just wait.

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 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:17, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 00:41, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 05:48, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * " was one of ten scuttled to escort a " I don't think "scuttled" as the right word here, and I'm not sure what it's supposed to be.
 * 3) **Changed.
 * 4) * I'd like to hear a little more about his reaction to the training mishap.
 * 5) **Added.
 * 6) * "Alpha Squadron, along with nine others" Nine other squadrons?
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:33, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thanks Ataru.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 18:43, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) Other stuff
 * 11) * "With a few maneuvers, he was able to fly up the enemy ship." In the middle of the first section. What does this mean exactly? He was able to fly upon the enemy ship? Any why did he need to do maneuvers anyway? Was he in danger of being shot down by the shuttle or something?
 * 12) **Hope I got this clarified.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Dance took a moment to revel about his life." This reads a little awkwardly to me. He took a moment to celebrate his life? Just not sure it's the best choice of words.
 * 14) **Rephrased.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * "A short time after destroying the shuttle, Dance's squad was one of ten sent to escort a shuttle" Mind changing one of those "shuttle"s to something else? It reads a little weird as is.
 * 16) **Changed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * "Before he did this, he proposed to Kaarz, who told him that she would think about it, but planned to go join the Rebellion along with Dance, while Ratua and Roothes headed to meet Ratua's family on Coruscant and Divini also decided to join the Rebel Alliance." Last sentence in the Bio. This is somewhat of a run-on. Mind splitting it up so that it doesn't seem so jumbled?
 * 18) **No problem. That was pretty ugly, actually. Should be better now.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) *Nice job once again. Cull Tremayne 01:21, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) **Thank you.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

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Second Battle of Bakura (Galactic Civil War)

 * Nomination by: - Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first major project here and a significant Expanded Universe event. I managed to correct most of the errors so it is up to you now to decide. Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *The intro could do a better job of setting the stage for the Battle of Bakura. How did the Rebels get there? How did the battle start? Etc. By and large, this needs to be about doubled in length
 * 3) *Redlinks in infobox.
 * 4) *You'll need a link to the conquest of G'rho
 * 5) *Who is "The Admiral" mentioned in 3rd paragraph of Background? Please provide context.
 * 6) *You'll need to explain the advantages of enteching humans a little more clearly please for the sake of the reader, as well as Sibwarra's role therein.
 * 7) *Is Shreeftut or whatever a title or person? There should be consistent capitalization depending on which one it is.
 * 8) *Please limit the use of parentheses in articles.
 * 9) *Correct these and I will continue my review. I would also caution you to beware of POV. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not bad for a first shot, but this will need some work. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)

XJ-2 airspeeder

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 11:14, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Bill, I believe this is killing me."

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Support
 * 1)  Greyman ( Talk ) 17:11, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:05, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 06:01, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Real minor thing: "was later put back into production by Narglatch during the Galactic Civil War." I'd suggest you remove this, or change it to something like "the line was later put back...". I'd do it myself, but I don't know if you'd prefer removing this info or rephrasing it. I think it's a bit irrelevant and confusing to the specific model and the article as it is now. Is that clear, or am I being a bit confusing here? Apologies if I'm not explaining myself well.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:01, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Tweaked. Thefourdotelipsis 08:46, 28 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Never thought I'd say this but...thanks Galaxies. :S Thefourdotelipsis 11:14, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Slyther Bushforb

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Yes, sweetheart?" "There's a girl wants to see you. Her name's Loddik." "A customer?" "I guess so. You'll want to see her anyway. She's a knockout."

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I kinda thought this would be longer. Cull Tremayne 06:02, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * I implore all readers to actually read the Databank entry before reading the Wook entry. Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Magaloof

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 23:23, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Beefed up old GA.

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:27, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * Believe it or not, it's WTS. Thefourdotelipsis 23:23, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Nar Hida

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 00:03, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: WTS...dynamite!

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Support
 * 1) It wasn't that bad.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:11, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Kinda boring though. Cull Tremayne 06:15, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * Another beefed up GA. Actually, with this one, I was just too lazy, and as Acky said, "Do you really want to put that on the main page?" Well, I don't really, but...too bad. We need to drive more people away with stupidity, people. Thefourdotelipsis 00:03, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

BesGas Three

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 00:27, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: In the words of Harry Secombe, "MORE!?"

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Support
 * 1) Lord Hydronium 01:40, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice, boring GA. And wow, that is a meaty BTS. Cull Tremayne 06:18, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * The first paragraph of the BTS should be reworked to more accurately show the out of universe history of it: an (I believe) unidentified refinery appeared in a McQuarrie painting used in the ISWU, a refinery appeared in ESB, and "BesGas Three" appeared in Dark Nest, with the WTS submission form being the first to connect all three. - Lord Hydronium 08:42, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Now with a nice, meaty BTS. Thefourdotelipsis 00:27, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

Janus Greejatus

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 02:25, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: No. 100.

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Support
 * 1) Congrats, Mr. Maddocks. Nice story, great article, and Havac did a good job with the BTS.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:01, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I'd hope you'd be able to FA this, since Greejatus is technically your character. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 20:56, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Excellent. Congrats. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:42, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:14, 28 November 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) In the BtS, it should state that the Greetajus image used in the Death Star Technical Companion was used to represent Ars Dangor, but that a different portrayal of Dangor was used in the Star Wars Trilogy Sourcebook - Special Edition (the last part may be less relevant to Greetajus but I would personally include it - your call). Haven't read the entirety of it yet but I look forward to it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 08:46, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 09:45, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 4) * "While there, he attempted to convince Tarkin to seize power with the battlestation,[1] but both the Death Star and Tarkin were later destroyed at the Battle of Yavin,[13] but Palpatine learned of Greejatus' encouragement of Tarkin, and decided to keep Chommell Minor native close at hand.[1]" One too many "buts," I think.
 * 5) **Fixed
 * 6) * Some more context on the Invasion of Naboo, the Battle of Yavin, and the Battle of Endor would be nice. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 12:10, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **I've added who destroyed the station for Yavin, but neither it or the Invasion of Naboo are directly relevant to Greejatus. What is relevant to Greejatus in terms of the Battle of Endor is already there. Thefourdotelipsis 12:26, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Fair enough - I only suggested that because I was asked for context on everything in my two noms. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 20:56, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 10) * Predictable and easy to control according to who? Palpy?
 * 11) **According to the CCG card, which doesn't specify, unfortunately.
 * 12) * I'd also say that he wasn't entirely faithful to Palpy, since he was encouraging Tarkin to defect.
 * 13) **Yes, that's what I get for not reading every source beforehand. :P Tweaked slightly.
 * 14) *Otherwise, excellently done. Ego-trippin', finger-lickin' good. :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:12, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **Thanks for the review. :D Thefourdotelipsis 21:12, 26 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Massive thanks to Havac for writing the BTS for me. Thefourdotelipsis 02:25, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I think mention of his Force-sensitivity earlier in the bio would be prudent, but it's not big enough of an issue to object over. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:42, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Yah, that's in there now. Thefourdotelipsis 21:12, 26 November 2008 (UTC)

Tynnan

 * Nomination by: --Eyrezer 03:24, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's been a while...

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Support Oppose Comments
 * 1) SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Knowing that the Biology objection will be fixed. Cull Tremayne 07:45, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *It's been addressed, I think. I'm new here, so please let me know if I haven't properly crossed it out below! --SavageBob 05:53, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) This is good, but I think there are a few places where we can polish it up a bit more.
 * 2) * "They were discovered by Republic scouts . . ." Do we know when?
 * 3) **Sadly not.
 * 4) * "Terraforming" throughout: I thought that the correct in-universe term for this was "Vongformed" when the YV are the ones doing it. Not so?
 * 5) **Vongformed redirects to terraforming on the Wook. Agents of Chaos itslef mentions neither word specifically so it is really just a matter or style. I don't mind either way.
 * 6) ***Well, since terraform means "to make like the Earth", it seems odd to use it for something so, er, alien. Our terraforming article does have this line: "The Yuuzhan Vong phrase was known as worldshaping, but others referred to it as Vongforming or Vongformation." SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * "This insulation gave them a plump form that many species viewed as cute and pudgy." Doesn't pudgy mean plump?
 * 8) **I removed the "and pudgy."
 * 9) ***"Pudgy" and "plump" do not mean the exact same thing; each carries connotations the other does not necessarily possess. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:22, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ****Pudgy includes the notion of shortness along with fatness, so it's probably the better of the two to use. However, I stand by my suggestion that using both is redundant. SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * I think the "Biology and appearance" section should be beefed up a bit to mention other notable parts of the Tynnan physiology. The current writeup makes no mention of their brown fur; large, pointed ears; claws; back noses, short snouts; whiskers; tails; number of digits; or bipedalism. As all of these things are evident from the illustrations we have available, they should be mentioned.
 * 12) * Nowhere is it mentioned that they are adept swimmers. Perhaps this should be added to the first section as well.
 * 13) **I'll get on to this and the previous one and let you know when I'm done.
 * 14) * The image captions are a bit sparse. Might be a good idea to rewrite them with the goal of being illustrative. Why was this particular image placed in this particular spot? For example, the image currently captioned "A Tynnan" might be changed to "Tynnans wore belts with many pouches but otherwise had no need of clothing," since that's what the text at that spot is talking about.
 * 15) **Lol - this objection doesn't surprise me, considering my reverse objection to your nom :p Although on second look, is this Tynnan actually wearing a shirt? It is hard because of the colouration.
 * 16) ***He he, yes. On closer inspection, I don't think that Tynnan is wearing a shirt; you can see little wisps of fur all down the sides of his/her belly and chest. While the captions on Lutrillian were probably too long before you commented, I do believe that captions should be descriptive, thus showing that a particular image was added for a reason, not just for decoration. This is especially important since all of our images are used under fair use provisions. Our claims to needing the images are bolstered if we can show why the images are necessary for the article to be better understood rather than being there just to look pretty. :) SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *Again, nice work! A little more spit and shine, and I think this is ready for FA. --SavageBob 05:28, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ** Commented on Eyrezer's comments. None of these things are make-it-or-break it for me, but I did want to voice my concerns. :) SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * The redlinks will be busted shortly, and a lead quote is being found. --Eyrezer 03:24, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm not opposing, so I'd like my remaining comments above to be taken as suggestions rather than opposition. The article's a good read on a fun species. Nice work, Eyrezer. SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *(Following comment moved from "Oppose" section above, as it is merely a suggestion. SavageBob 07:40, 7 December 2008 (UTC)) I think the descriptions of individual Tynnans in the "Tynnans in the galaxy" section are too long. An entire detailed paragraph about each notable Tynnan is just too much in my opinion. Better to cut them to a sentence or two and let the reader click the link on their name if they want to learn more.
 * 2) **I disagree. If any of those individuals had decent article written for them, they could each be FAs. These are summaries.
 * 3) ***They're looong summaries, though. In an ideal world (of my own creation :)), these would be short, just mentioning each character and what he or she is notable or. Then, if I wanted a summary, I could find it in the lead section of the character's article. Then, if I want even more detail, I would find it by reading the full body of the character's article. The summaries in the Tynnan article now are of lead length, so it seems a bit much to have them all. And while I understand that there are few enough known Tynnans in SW fiction to make this section's size reasonable, imagine that with each new notable Tynnan mentioned in SW fiction that we add another similarly sized paragraph. Eventually, the section becomes unwieldy. Granted, that time is not now, but I just don't see the point in having it all beefy now and then cutting it back in the future anyway. SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ****They're not that long. Can you please indicate the rule under which this objection falls? Sheer opinion cannot be sufficient reason to object. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:22, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *****Wookieepedia's Manual of Style includes this line: "For information on the most basic writing techniques and styles, which are used here, see Wikipedia's Manual of Style." Part of Wikipedia's manual of style is the summary style guideline that asserts that long sections should be spun off into their own articles, leaving only a summary in their place. Now, we don't have a firm rule that we follow summary style here, so I guess this objection is not binding. But take a look at some of the summaries in the Tynnan article. How is it pertinent to our knowledge of Tynnans as a whole to know that "A number of items were stolen by Gomalo, a Rodian slaver recently released from prison, whose own sculpture was among the loot. It contained the locations of a nebula in which he had stowed the body of a Jedi Knight frozen in carbonite. The Teleus' artworks were later recovered by Ezra Du'Re of the Office of Peace and Security"? Or that "The team struggled to find a buyer for their unique item and was forced to approach the dangerous hunter Tyro Viveca. This contact turned the tables on Noone, hunting the thief in his compound on Kabal. It was only Dawson's demolitions skills that enabled the team of thieves to defeat the Krish and escape the planet"? This is only tangentially about Tynnans, in my opinion, so it should be cut down. But since there's no policy on summary style here, I'm leaving this as my personal opinion (please show me the policy that says I can't express that), and not objecting based on it. :) SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

ARC-77

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 06:52, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Well, you sir, are a cowardly son of a bitch! You just shot an unarmed man!" "Well, he shoulda armed himself..."

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Support Oppose
 * 1) This user knows that Fordo owns.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:51, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Fordo doesnt just own, but he PWNS!!! --Clonehunter 19:31, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) A bit of context on the Muunilinst 10 in the intro would be helpful. Otherwise, great job. I love the "Biography" titles.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:24, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added. Thefourdotelipsis 22:09, 3 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Rescanned infobox image is incoming. Thefourdotelipsis 06:52, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, it's not, but if someone could oblige, it'd be much appreciated. :P Thefourdotelipsis 22:09, 3 December 2008 (UTC)

The Trickery of Vosdia Nooma

 * Nomination by: 19:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Because setting precedents seems to be my thing, I present to you: Rodian Theater at its finest!

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Comments
 * Project started because of Lord Hydronium's QOTD nom listed here. Go and read it (and vote if you'd like). It essentially embodies the entire play and will be a nice setup for your readthrough (which is actually pretty long for being single-source and information culled from a review). Thank god for HoloNet News entries. 19:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Biscuit Baron

 * Nomination by: 20:00, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Dinner and a movie!

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Support Oppose
 * 1) —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:41, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Trendsetting? Nah. Cull Tremayne 07:17, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Good article nominations/Biscuit Baron. 20:00, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Mandalore the Indomitable

 * Nomination by: Greyman ( Talk ) 15:09, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Naturally, as a part of WP:TOTJ.

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Support
 * 1) Previewed this by author request prior to nomination.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:09, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:17, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Nostalgia. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:35, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

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Comments

Crev Bombaasa

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:37, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: guest nom for Cav's one-man WookieeProject.

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Support
 * 1) Always liked this character.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:56, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * "A well-educated man of refined manner and good taste, " A bit POVish IMHO.
 * 3) **Changed.
 * 4) * I'd like to see a link to Hutts' demise in the intro.
 * 5) **Linked to a battle.
 * 6) * "A cultured, well-educated man with a taste for sharp suits and expensive jewelery, he had an insect-like appearance and a genteel, refined manner. Despite this, however, he was known to have a vicious streak" All of this would fit better in P&T, IMO, but if there's a good explanation for its placement, I'm not concerned.
 * 7) **Well, I like to give readers a bit of an idea of a character P&T in the bio as it provides context for his actions, and I think it's particularly relevant to highlight his shift from bad-guy to good-guy.
 * 8) ***Meh, whatever. As long as it's not insisted upon that others necessarily adhere to this. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Sure. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * "Bombaasa's Cartel allowed his and others' criminal organizations protection from such large groups" Some awkward wording here.
 * 11) **Tweaked a little; satisfactory?
 * 12) * " unencumbered in exchange for a pipelink" Could this possibly be made a little clearer (the pipelink bit). As far as I know, that's only internet slang, and not really a word.
 * 13) **I think it's what's used in the source, but I've clarified it as much as I think I can.
 * 14) ***That's better. I almost changed it to pipeline, but even that didn't make sense. What you've got now is good. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * "For several years, Bombaasa personally continued to rise in prominence until he effectively ruled Pembric II." This sentence does not fit well where it is-it disrupts the flow of the prose.
 * 16) **You're right, it's a byproduct of adding stuff in after writing it. I've moved it up to the next section; there's not really anywhere else it can go.
 * 17) * "The New Republic envoys and Drake and his bouncers ultimately fled Kebbo and his backup, as well as a fuming Bombaasa" Sentence is unclear.
 * 18) **Better?
 * 19) * Contextify Wild Karrde on first mention.
 * 20) **"&hellip;the ship used by Talon Karrde, a powerful crime lord and information broker&hellip;"
 * 21) ***Facepalm. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * "after leaving his ship in the company of an attractive woman;" Clausal antecedent is unclear; who left the ship?
 * 23) **Reworked.
 * 24) * The bit on the Solos killing the commander and yammosk is incorrect. Please read over The Unifying Force again and correct it.
 * 25) **Removed it, it's not really necessary.
 * 26) ***I just checked the book, and the Solos had to be rescued by Karrde and Calrissian. That might be pertinent. If not, I'll strike. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) ****I added in a little clarifying it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * "As Karrde implored Bombaasa to keep the ship in his targets" Unclear sentence. Not sure what this should be.
 * 29) **Clarified.
 * 30) * "Additionally, he had a taste for expensive jewelery, which was described as tasteful" Wording.
 * 31) **Changed.
 * 32) * "Bombaasa's newfound compassion" Is compassion the right word for this?
 * 33) **Changed.
 * 34) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:08, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) **And yourself. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:00, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * A really neat character. Cross-medium and multi-author, but without any continuity issues whatsoever (not including the visual discrepancy in Galaxies). Thanks to Culator for providing me with the Galaxies info and thanks to Cav for letting me have this. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:37, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Tam Elgrin

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 04:03, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first-ever GA, over 1000 words, so I thought, "What the hell. I'll try it."

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Support
 * 1) Next time, though, make sure you copyedit more thoroughly, 'cuz I might not be able to fix everything. ;-)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:54, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * The intro could be a little longer. Try expanding it from stuff relevant to Danni Quee and Tarc.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Contextify Antilles on first mention.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * P&T can be much, much larger. (And should be).
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) ***Yes, but you did so with a lot of redundant referencing. Not that I couldn't go in and fix it, but some lessons are better learned by experience. If two sentences in a row are referenced from the same source, there's no need to add additional tags. Additionally, the P&T doesn't flow well and could use restructuring. Take it slow, organize it well instead of rushing the fix. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:36, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Addressed, I hope.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:44, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *****There's a whole bunch on pages 159-162 of the paperback that could go in there. Take your pick, but in particular, some of Tser's comments are really good stuff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:53, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ******Well this objection was a doozy, wasn't it? :) Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 03:20, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * The relationship with the Solos, Tarc, and Elgrin should be expanded.
 * 13) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 23:27, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Due to my large knowledge of Enemy Lines, I was able to do a lot of cleanup myself, but be aware that there was lots needed. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:53, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

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Zonder

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Evasive Action

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Comments
 * Maybe there should be something in there about how his active life was untypical for Selonian males? Yrfeloran 22:32, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

IG-72

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Interesting at first but it goes downhill from there.

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Support
 * 1) IGs are awesome.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:11, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "gaining notoriety for the IG-series" A bit of context on why the fact that he was of the IG series was notable waould be good.
 * 3) **I think you're misinterpreting the text. Its saying that his actions as a bounty hunter made more people aware of the existence of the IG-series.
 * 4) ***Bah! I completely misread that. I thought you mean the was notable because he was an IG.
 * 5) * Can we get a date on his hunt for Tallon in the intro?
 * 6) **Done.
 * 7) * What were his seemingly random choice of targets? You mention that his targets appeared random to many. Do we know what was the pattern was, then?
 * 8) **Not really. The implication is that he was taking down people for the Empire, but it's not canonically established.
 * 9) ***I suspected that this wasn't revealed (it's not like you to miss stuff). No problems here then.
 * 10) * "The four IG-88s carried on with their planned Droid Revolution, but by the time of the Battle of Endor they had all been destroyed or deactivated." I'd say this bit is unneeded.
 * 11) **Well, I don't like to end bios too suddenly, and this sentence essentially serves as a compressed legacy section. It's not essential but I think it's somewhat relevant and does more good than harm.
 * 12) ***You're right. I was a little unsure about this objection for that reason.
 * 13) *Good work overall.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:39, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thank you very much. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:55, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Working on getting a better infobox image. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Argyus

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:11, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Done in a day.

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Support
 * 1) Pre-FAN reviewed. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:36, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:53, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I'd like to see the bio subsectioned. The bio starts way too suddenly; it doesn't establish all the facts it should (that he's a senate commando, the time period, preferably his species, etc). Additionally, the bio shouldn't be a summary of the sources (e.g. "His true loyalties revealed"...it should be established he was a traitor before it's revealed to the others, etc.) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:15, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I actually did establish that Dooku bribed him earlier on. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:16, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **My mistake. It could probably use a little more elaboration, if possible, though; it just suddenly goes from "Dooku bribed him" to "Ventress sent him the all-clear" after a several paragraph interval. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:21, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***As far as subsections go, how many do you want? The only way it could work is one paragraph for "Republic service" and the rest for "Separatist agent." Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:23, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1,059 words. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:11, 7 December 2008 (UTC)