Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Silya Shessaun


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Yes, it's over 1,000 words. Yes, barely. Thefourdotelipsis 12:49, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Imperialles 22:43, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) She's pretty in that picture, even though she is wearing a whole set of bed sheets and a comforter.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 00:24, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:27, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:05, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Pasta-bowl of Fiolli:
 * 2) * In the intro: "&hellip;since she seemed to focus on the larger issues of her sector more than her native Thesme." Okay, it is a nit-pick-ery suggestion, but perhaps saying that she focused on the sector rather than exclusively on her home planet. It places the wording in a more positive light, I think.
 * 3) * (Bio:)"Despite her best efforts, her previous ties to Amidala and the more vocally anti-Palpatine Senators forced her to step down from office." Not sure I follow. Was she kicked out by the anti-Palpatine crowd or the pro-Palpatine crowd? Should it also read, "Despite her best efforts and her previous ties to Amidala&hellip;?"
 * 4) * (P&T:) "She soon learned the error of her ways, but was still unable to act while in office&hellip;" What did she learn? What did it cost her? I don't recall this being mentioned earlier. Perhaps this was the confusing section for me.
 * 5) * (P&T:) This section indicates that her helping the sector, rather than just her home planet, was quite a big deal on Thesme. In the intro it is stated as "only minor criticism." Please clarify this.
 * 6) *Good work so far, 4dot. Keep the beat going.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:25, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Two things
 * 8) * "Shessaun" is used in every single sentence in the intro. Could you please rejig a bit to use more pronouns?
 * 9) **Fixed.
 * 10) * This isn't a hard-and-fast objection, but the size of the intro is not in proportion to the size of the main body. The intro is over 200 of the slightly-over-1000 words, and looks a bit strange. Honestly, this is sort of gaming (for want of a better word) the 1,000 word rule, in my opinion. But, as I said, it's not a clear-cut objection; I'm interested as to your response, and we'll take it from there. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:13, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **I see where you're coming from. However, you can't really accuse me of gaming the system, since the intro was the first thing I wrote. Still, that doesn't change how it looks now. To be honest, I don't think it's a major problem. It's not really fluffed up or embellished, it's simply the facts, and, obviously, not all of them. Thefourdotelipsis 00:04, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Fair enough. It still looks odd to me, but as you said, it's no major problem. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:05, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 14) *Another pic, if we could get one, would be look good at the bottom. Maybe a funeral one? Not a hard and fast objection, just a suggestion. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **I thought of that, but then I think she's been deleted from that scene, and I only really put extra images in an article if there's no other images in the first place (see: Cal Omas). However, I don't really have any strong feelings on this, so feel free to add an extra picture if you think it will improve that section. :) Thefourdotelipsis 22:47, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 13:09, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * And the WTS beat goes on... Thefourdotelipsis 12:49, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Anyone from LFL who doubts the success of WTS just needs to look at Fourdot's resume.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:55, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Not exactly an objection: I would think that she is in Dressing a Galaxy, but I can't be sure. Perhaps someone with the book can check? There may even be another good picture. -- Ozzel 22:44, 12 April 2008 (UTC)