Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 6) Per AgriCorps consensus, nominators are restricted to four nominations on the GAN page at any one time. Once one nomination is removed from the page as either successful or unsuccessful, another can be added.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Neimoidian controller (Saak'ak)

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 22:30, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Finally! I have wait a long time for this. Lets not screw it up.

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) I'll vote! Just don't hurt me! Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:25, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:26, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice work. Watch out for contractions, though; they are not very encyclopedic. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:56, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * I think this should be. Mastergarrett9 13:36, Febuary 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Nice article, you've got my vote! --Celtic22 19:59, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  CC7567  (talk) 19:09, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object 12px"> QuiGonJinn (Talk) 20:27, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Please work on your grammar. This is a requirement per GAN Rule 1: an article must be well-written, and "well-written" includes good grammar. Incorrect grmmar furthermore makes it difficult to review articles, as it often makes the meaning of certain phrases confusing.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:55, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Ookay, I have now read the whole article. I fixed the errors I found, but if theres more of them, could you give me at least one example. I know it's not your job, but it would greatly help me in future. Kreivi Wolter 11:29, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Skippy'll have a look
 * 4) * Bio: Context for the "blockade of Naboo" and for "the crisis". You could also mention that Gunray was the Neimoidian in charge of the operation.
 * 5) **Fixed the crisis, but I wonder is it really necessary to tell about Gunray's role in this article? Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * He then managed to open the door. Consider Kenobi then managed to avoid ambiguity.
 * 7) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * Kenobi decided to find a way to cut the doors power off by destroying the generator, which caused the Neimoidian controller to deny it by screaming. What's "it"? What is he denying? The obvious fact that the generator has been destroyed?
 * 9) **XD when you put it in that way. Uhh, better now? Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * was later able to escape from the ship. Who did so?
 * 11) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * Please reword the following as I cannot really understand what you mean: Kenobi then questioned the controller about his work on the room, which the Neimoidian replied that he was monitoring the power generators of the hangar bay; also Kenobi cared for little
 * 13) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *I like this. Consider creating a sub-category of images for this guy's. Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:40, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) **Why the h*ll not? : ) Thanks for the review. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) The Grand Master
 * 17) * Is the "small room full of computers" the room from which he controlled the hangar bay power generators? If so, please clarify this.
 * 18) **Yes it is : ) Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * "which caused the Neimoidian controller to deny him to do so by screaming." Do you mean the Neimoidian tried to prevent him from doing so by screaming? Please clarify.
 * 20) **Removed "by screaming". Better now? Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***"By screaming" wasn't really the problem. What you mean by "To deny him to do so" is still unclear. This wording does not work here.
 * 22) ****Hmmm. I tried to describe this quote: "No! Don't touch the power generator". Damn, how do I have to say it? Kreivi Wolter 18:48, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) *****That's not "denying" him anything. "Deny" is the problem with the current wording.
 * 24) ******What word would suit better? Kreivi Wolter 20:09, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) *******Probably something like "prevent." Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:21, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) ********But "prevent" would indicate that he tried to stop the Jedi, but he only told him not to do it. Hmm, I have to say, I'm not sure how you say that in english... could the word "forbid" do the trick? Kreivi Wolter 12:23, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) *********Hmm, then perhaps "to yell at him not to touch the generator," or something like that?
 * 28) **********Hey, there it is! That fits perfectly. Thank you for you help, again. Kreivi Wolter 19:53, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) * "When the generator was destroyed, he only wanted to be left alone." Why did he want to be left alone?
 * 30) **I dont know. In the game, he only says "Please, leave me alone". Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) * Because the player can choose not to interact with the controller, you should add in the bts that it is unknown if any actual conversation between Kenobi and the controller took place in canon.
 * 32) ** I would rather not. Its already told by the Gamemechanics-template. Just like in the article Unidentified Naboo merchant, which is a good article. Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) ***In that game the player has to interact with the merchant. It is the player's choice whether to kill or realease him, but either way the player must interact with him. The player does not have to interact with this controller. For an example of what I mean, see such good articles as Kadir and Larrim.
 * 34) ****Um, the player dont actually have to interact with the merchant. In game, it is entire possible not to even meet him, and the player dont even have to. Kreivi Wolter 15:11, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) *****Well then that article has incorrect information, and I will bring this up at the next AC meeting. However, the fact remains that the player's conversation with the Neimoidian may or may not have canonically taken place, and thus even if it did take place, the form of the conversation is unknown (unless there are no options for what you say during the game), and this needs to be stated in your article.
 * 36) ******No need to do that; the merchant has been updated accordingly. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size:
 * 1) *******Well, what can I say to that? Better now? Kreivi Wolter 18:48, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I have gone through and fixed some some more of your grammar, but please continue to work on this in the future. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:35, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **I will. Thanks for the help. May the Force be with you : ) Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Have you checked the game guide for a mention/any new information?  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:39, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *Of what? Damn, I didn't even knew that that exist. Kreivi Wolter 05:57, December 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Just FYI, almost every Star Wars game (except the handheld, cellphone, flash and old Atari/NES/Arcade ones) has an accompanying strategy guide, so you must be sure to have them checked before nominating an article from a video game. This time, you could try contacting, who has the guide, but it's quite hard to catch up with him. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:27, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Ookay, I keep that in mind. I asked the said user about the mention. Now we can only wait :¨( Kreivi Wolter 18:48, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Doesn't the guide include a Voice cast-section? In that case, aren't all of the characters undoubtedly mentioned in the book? Kreivi Wolter 15:51, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *****All done. Finally I found someone who owns that book here on Finland. Kreivi Wolter 19:15, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Fett
 * 11) * "During the Federation's blockade of the planet Naboo he worked in a small computer room in the Saak'ak, where he was confronted and questioned by Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi..."' Obi-Wan was still a Padawan during the blockade of Naboo. He officially became a Knight after Yoda knighted him, which was after the blockade and the capture of Gunray.
 * 12) **And after the death of Darth Maul : ) . I realized it this morning. Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) * "However, Trade Federation Viceroy Nute Gunray, under the command of Sith Lord Darth Sidious, intended to kill the Jedi and begin the Invasion of Naboo." Quite confusing. Gunray did not intended to kill Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon, he wanted to after Sidious gave the Viceroy the order to do so. IIRC, you should say that the Jedi entered the Saak'ak as Republic ambassadors, but their coverup was foiled by that TC-14 droid.
 * 14) **Your objection just contains too much information which doesn't relate to this article. And what do you mean he didn't intend to kill them? I think he did. Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ***I realize that, however, you misunderstood me. Though, this objection appears to be corrected.
 * 16) * "The Jedi were able to escape Gunray's trap, but they were later separated." Separated? How were the Jedi separated? Also, just like the preceding objection, elaborate a little more on what Gunray tried to do on the Saak'ak. Without this information, the article is confusing.
 * 17) **Can't tell too much, as it doesn't relate to this article. However, fixed some of it. Better now? Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) ***It's relevant. However, it's fine now.
 * 19) * " Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi, who was trying to reach the hangar to escape from the Saak'ak, found his way to the room where the Neimoidian controller was working." I'm confused here. You say that the Jedi left Gunray's trap (which wasn't fully explained) but now they're still on the Saak'ak? Please clairfy. I would like to know how they separated, what this trap was and why suddenly did Obi-Wan find this room. Also, again, Obi-Wan is not a Jedi Knight at this point.
 * 20) **Again, much of that doesn't relate this article. Fixed the Jedi Knight thought. Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***No; you misunderstood me again, Kreivi. Please clarify how Obi-Wan found the room where this Neimoidian was in. However, I see that Jonny corrected this.
 * 22) *I'll continue later on.  JangFett  (Talk) 12:47, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **Well, much of your obcjetions fixed by Jonjedigrandmaster. Kreivi Wolter 19:53, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) ***I thank Jonny for that then. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 21:28, December 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) One more: could you condense the information about Kenobi and Jinn in the second paragraph of the bio? There's just a bit too much extraneous info on them there.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:21, December 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) *Pffffff... first I'm told to expand the section, as it's too fuzzy without the info of the Jedi. And now it's too long. Sigh... but, I think it's not too long; just look the same section on article OOM-9. Sure, this section is little longer than the one in OOM-9, but like Jang said, the section is little too confusing without it. Kreivi Wolter 17:20, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) **Not only is this section longer than OOM-9's, OOM-9 is also a much larger article than this one, meaning that this section is much larger proportionately. There's just too much extraneous detail right now: "Shortly after the beginning of the blockade, Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn and his Padawan, Obi-Wan Kenobi, were sent by the Republic's Supreme Chancellor, Finis Valorum, to negotiate a solution between the Federation and Naboo. However, Trade Federation Viceroy Nute Gunray, under the command of Sith Lord Darth Sidious, was ordered to kill the Jedi and begin the Invasion of Naboo. The Jedi were able to escape Gunray's attempted assassination in the Saak'ak's conference room, but they were later separated after being attacked by destroyer droids." All this could easily be condensed. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:56, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Good now? Kreivi Wolter 21:04, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) Attack of the Clone
 * 30) * "Seeking his opportunity": this really isn't an existing English idiom; please clarify what you mean here.
 * 31) **Better now? Kreivi Wolter 11:55, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) * "which caused the appalled Neimoidian controller to yell at him not to touch the machine": can this be reworded at all? The word flow is really quite choppy.
 * 33) **Ah, this. As you can see, it was already argued above. Do you have any ideas how to improve this? 'cause I surely dont have any. Kreivi Wolter 12:06, February 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) ***The "yell at him not to touch the machine" can simply be fixed by modifying it to something like "yell at him and order him not to touch the machine" or something similar.  CC7567  (talk) 07:58, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) ****Mmm. Seems to fit. Thank you for your help. Kreivi Wolter 16:30, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) * Per WP:S, if there's more than one source/appearance, then everything needs to be sourced.  CC7567  (talk) 20:14, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 37) **Done. Oh, and btw, why did you removed the link to the Invasion of Naboo?--Kreivi Wolter 12:09, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 38) ***My mistake.  CC7567  (talk) 18:55, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 39) * "Shortly after the beginning of the blockade, Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn and his Padawan, Obi-Wan Kenobi, arrived at the Saak'ak to negotiate a solution between the Federation and Naboo. However, Trade Federation Viceroy Nute Gunray was instructed by Sith Lord Darth Sidious to kill the Jedi and begin the invasion of Naboo. The Jedi managed to survive the assassination attempt, but they were later separated while trying to reach the hangar to escape from the Saak'ak." How is any of this at all directly relevant to the Neimoidian? This much context really isn't necessary.
 * 40) **Aghhh! One just can't please them all. I can, of course, remove or shorten that, but wont it become too fuzzy if I just tell that Kenobi arrived at the room? Kreivi Wolter 21:35, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) ***Is mentioning Sidious necessary for the reader to understand the article about the controller? Is Gunray? That's a simple question that will answer yours.  CC7567  (talk) 07:37, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 42) ****Better now? Kreivi Wolter 10:04, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) * "The Neimoidian controller quickly explained that he had not planned the invasion, and Kenobi asked him how to get to the hangar." I find it very strange for these two clauses to be linked when they have close to no relation to the other.
 * 44) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 21:35, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) * Are you sure that all of the P&T is canonical despite including information for the "light side" choices, as the placement of the Endgame tag implies?
 * 46) **I used it per the articles like this and this (both are GA). Kreivi Wolter 21:35, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) * "the Neimoidian is encountered in the first level": encountered by whom?
 * 48) **By that ultimate power who controls Kenobi : ) Kreivi Wolter 21:35, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) * Please watch your tense in the Bts. The shifts are making it confusing to understand the scenarios.  CC7567  (talk) 19:40, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 50) **Again, per the articles above. Kreivi Wolter 21:35, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 51) ***Neither of the articles you reference have any bearing over the still-confusing tenses found in the last paragraph of the Bts.  CC7567  (talk) 07:37, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) ****Ah, you referred to the last part. Better now? Kreivi Wolter 20:38, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 53) * "While the Neimoidian lacks an official name, he is credited as "Neimoidian controller" in the game's credits." Your word choice implies that the Neimoidian was credited as a Neimoidian in the game&mdash;if you're going to use "credited," it should be saying that Coopwood was credited with voicing him. Please find a more appropriate wording.  CC7567  (talk) 21:09, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 54) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 15:00, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 55) ***I'm changing the "called as" under the assumption that it's just a careless error and that you know that it isn't proper English.  CC7567  (talk) 19:09, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 56) ****Ugh. That was just.... stupid. Even by my standards. Thank you for both the help and the review. Kreivi Wolter 19:23, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * I have thought to made as many articles of this PM game as possible, but now that I know that there is an official guide (which I dont have), and theres really isn't many users that owns it (at least as far as i know), do I have to cancel this idea?. Kreivi Wolter 12:23, December 10, 2009 (UTC)

First Battle of Korriban (Great Hyperspace War)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:36, December 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yes, more TOTJ.

(2 ACs/0 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:09, January 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) —Tommy 9281  Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 04:46, February 2, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Blacklist:
 * 2) * You use Great Hyperspace War' three times in the first four sentences of the intro, making the prose rather unwieldy.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * All of the background info you give in the prelude makes it seem like you are gearing up to talk about the Great Hyperspace War itself. This section needs to be reworked so that it talks specifically about the events that led up to the battle of Korriban, not the Great Hyperspace War.
 * 5) **That section has been rewritten.
 * 6) * "Sadow's forces dropped out of hyperspace above the graveyard world of Korriban, but Sadow's forces were greeted someone they never expected..." "Sadow's forces" is used twice in the same sentence; please alternate.
 * 7) **Changed.
 * 8) * "the greatest threat the Sith Empire had ever known..." is copied right from the source. Please rewrite this in your own words.
 * 9) **Changed.
 * 10) * "However, Sadow had a plan; he ordered one of his doomed and nearly destroyed to make a suicide run..." One of his doomed and nearly destroyed whats?
 * 11) **Whoops. Addressed.
 * 12) *That's all. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 02:10, January 30, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Second Battle of Korriban (Great Hyperspace War)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:12, December 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Ho-hum.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:51, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:04, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Kreivi Wolter 16:29, January 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object Soresu
 * 1) * Seeing that surrender was their only option, Dakhan ordered suicide attacks on the Republic forces, Clearly, surrender was not their only option if they managed to suicide attack.
 * 2) **Not really. The Atlas, which is the source I went to get info on this stage of the battle, says "When it became clear that surrender was their only option, acting Dark Lord Shar Dakhan ordered his warriors into suicide attacks against the invading fleet."
 * 3) ***Well that makes no sense to me. If they did something else then surrender wasn't the only option. Sigh. Whatever the Atlas says. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:51, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * You missed a description of the aftermath quote, so the source has become the description instead, and there is no ref tag. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:16, December 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:26, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) The Grand Master
 * 7) * Why the speculation here? "but the Koros forces, with numbers on their side and fueled by Teta's rhetoric, seemed too much." Also, the meaning is unclear. "Seemed too much" for what?
 * 8) **There isn't speculation in the sentence, or at least not intentionally. Reworded.
 * 9) * "The Sith Empire had fallen." Awfully short and choppy, and I can't help but feel that it's somewhat redundant. Please combine it or remove.
 * 10) **Removed.
 * 11) * The Great Hyperspace War template says that the Gank Massacres is the following conflict, whereas the infobox currently lists the Great Droid Revolution. Which is correct?
 * 12) **Gank Massacre seems to be correct. Changed.
 * 13) *Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:02, December 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 06:00, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) Toprawa:
 * 16) *I had you create the Koros army article for one of your other TOTJ battle noms and asked you to go ahead and update the links in your other battle noms, which you clearly you have not done. This needs to be handled before I even think about reviewing any further. Full and accurate linking is a necessity in writing and reviewing articles, Floyd. Not an option. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Bah on a stick. I totally forgot about that. My mistake. I went ahead and did it just now, so check it out.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:08, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Khar Shian

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 04:23, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first ever moon nom. A milestone!

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:36, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Nayayen ... TALK  09:00, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:11, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Just one thing in the intro: "This maneuver, coupled with some other trickery by Sadow, resulted in..." sounds rather unencyclopedic, can you reword this?  Nayayen ... TALK  19:47, December 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:20, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Oh, one question. "...that fortress was a mere decoy, with Sadow's actual base and defenses on the far side of Khar Delba." Is that supposed to say Khar Shian?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah, yes. My mistake. Fixed.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:09, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Ronika

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:28, December 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yeppidy-doo.

(2 ACs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:25, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:51, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:27, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * which caused Ronika to red from orbit. Missing a word or two, no?
 * 3) **Whoops. Addressed.
 * 4) *That's it for me. I'm liking these new noms, they're much improved IMO. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:04, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:18, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *** :) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:25, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * You need to link to Koros army somewhere in this article.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:28, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Zeta Five

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 05:51, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My final nom from Golden Age of the Sith/Fall of the Sith Empire. I never thought this day would come... *sniff*

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:06, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 00:28, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:33, February 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:23, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 03:36, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I could be wrong on this, but I seem to recall Kahorr sending the ship on the route even though it was risky because it was shorter. If so, please add this info. If I'm wrong, then never mind. :P  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  18:28, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Checked the issue, and you are correct sir. Info added.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:28, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) The Grand Master
 * 4) * Prose is unwieldy in the Description. Way too many "the ship"s and improper comma usage.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * I'm seeing repetitive phrasing throughout the article; change some things up a bit.
 * 7) **I've tried to change some things up a little. Is this good enough?
 * 8) * Intro is too long in proportion to the body.
 * 9) **Intro has been shrunken.
 * 10) *As a note: please watch your linking. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:50, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Siene Symm

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:50, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Go, Nien Nunb-lookalike from 1988!

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 15:51, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)   Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:40, January 17, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The intro needs an expansion. I'm sure there's info to add to it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:01, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:14, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) "Also during this mission, Symm and the others in the Long Shot discovered that General Reekeene had been captured by Imperial forces and sent to the planet Flankers, whose sun would go nova in only hours. Symm piloted the Long Shot and fought the Imperials' defenses." Where did he fight the Imperials? I assume it's Flankers, but that info should be added in so this sentence doesn't stand out so much.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:07, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Have a look.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:16, January 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **I still feel that it's not as clear as it could be. "Wanting to save her, the crew of the Long Shot went to Flankers. Symm piloted the Long Shot and fought the Imperials' defenses. Later, a Squad was sent to rescue Reekeene; Symm kept them informed about the time they had before the impending doom." You seem to say that they went to Flankers to save her twice ("Wanting to save her, the crew of the Long Shot went to Flankers" and "Later, a Squad was sent to rescue Reekeene."). One of those is not needed, unless I am interpreting it wrong. Also, could you add "above Flankers" or whatever to the end of "Imperials' defenses?"  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:06, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Better? Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:28, January 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Modon Kira

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 06:31, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A badass.

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:56, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Nothing to oppose. Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:21, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:14, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Why just GA? Why not FA? Kreivi Wolter 16:44, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) *I put this article on here because I have too many article on the FAN page already. I plan to put it up for FA when some of my FA noms get cleared off the FAN page.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:24, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) The beast riders, cool. I don't see why I shouldn't vote.--Celtic22 17:17, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Blacklist:
 * 2) * Missing sources.
 * 3) **I'm not sure which ones are missing... help me out here?
 * 4) *** I'm not going to give you the answers. It's not what the teacher teaches, but what the student learns. ;)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) ***** Are you completely sure? Aside from checking all available sources, you might also want to check with someone like to see if Modon has any mention in any fact files.
 * 7) ******Thanks to Cav, I got the Fact File mentions. I believe this to be addressed.
 * 8) ******* It is not. See the second part of my last statement: "Aside from checking all available sources..." I am not giving you any more clues, either. It is your responsibility as the article's nominator to be thorough. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 01:14, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ********Herein lies the problem. I don't have access to a large number of sources, and I have no idea where I should look.
 * 10) ********* Ignorance is no excuse. As the most active TOTJ person around as of late, I have access to most of the necessary sources. As the project's lead, I'd like to think that contacting me would be the most logical place to start. I've actually tried several times over the past few weeks to contact you via IRC, but you've been been unresponsive/unavailable for whatever reason. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 01:38, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **********Well, for whatever reason I haven't received or seen those messages. Is it possible for you to get on IRC now or soon so we can work this little issue out? I'm available now and will be for at least a couple more hours.
 * 12) * Missing info from the audio drama.
 * 13) **Modon Kira neither appears or is mentioned in the audio drama.
 * 14) *** And that's exactly why you need to state the info from the audio drama.
 * 15) *** P.S.--Modon Kira is not replaced in the audio drama by Gobee.
 * 16) ****Well that's what it seemed like to me. Addressed.
 * 17) ***** What it seemed like to you is wrong, and is also unacceptable when it is not factual. Try again.
 * 18) ******When I posted that last comment I actually already had removed the part about Gobee; I was just saying that's what it seemed like to me.
 * 19) ******* I hear you, but it is still not complete. I assume you don't have the audio, so I'll go ahead and fix this for you at this point. Keep in mind, however, that by browsing some of the corresponding TOTJ articles, you would have found the correct information.
 * 20) * This can can use a thorough copyedit.
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * The intro reads a little unwieldy. You may want to rework some of it, preferably the pipelinking. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 07:05, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **What do you mean by pipelinking?
 * 24) ***I've taken care of it. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 05:50, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) * "They relented when Galia confessed that she had willingly joined herself to Modon's son, and the Jedi instead went to lead a peace mission that would ask Amanoa to end the war." This reads like it's from Galia's article. Please rewrite it so that it's from Modon's POV.
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) * "Little did Iziz know however, Galia willingly left with the Beast Riders so she could consecrate her love for Oron Kira." This sentence is unnecessary, because it has nothing to do with Modon Kira. Furthermore, this same point is made further down in the next paragraph.
 * 28) **Addressed.
 * 29) * You need to verify and state (in a "Legacy" section) whether or not this individual was named after Modon Kira.
 * 30) **He's not named after Modon Kira, but he has been stated to be one of his descendants. Addressed.
 * 31) ***What you've added is sufficient, but the fact that someone of your experience has to be repeatedly reminded to cover all bases (especially with something so obvious as this) is borderline unacceptable. Step ya game up. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 01:47, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) *That's all. I've done some cleaning up but it's otherwise good. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 05:50, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) The Grand Master
 * 34) *The intro is too long for an article of this size.
 * 35) **I've cut it down some; is this good enough?
 * 36) ***Yes, but I think it's too long for a single paragraph; I'd suggest splitting it back to two paragraphs but cutting it down just a little more. Also, much of the article has huge blocks of text, can some of these be split into smaller paragraphs?
 * 37) *No link for the "attack" in the Legacy section?
 * 38) **No there isn't. However, this poses a problem; I do not possess Empire's End and although I could create an article, it would be painfully short and missing lots of information. I could create the article anyway if you wish.
 * 39) ***Eh, I guess go ahead and make a stub and see if someone will update it :P.
 * 40) ****That course of action is unacceptable. If you don't possess something, it is still your responsibility to find someone who does so that you can be certain you are not missing any applicable information. You have used this excuse several times before, that you don't have access to sources, and quite frankly it's been worn out. If you can't (or won't) obtain sources for something for whatever reason, then perhaps you shouldn't attempt to nominate it. Don't expect others to pick up slack where there shouldn't be any in the first place. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 01:51, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) * Watch the tense shifting in the BTS.
 * 42) **Addressed.
 * 43) *I've taken care of these in my copyedit, but again, please watch your under-linking. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 20:19, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * You crank these TOTJ noms out far too quickly without making sure all the bases are covered. Don't sacrifice quality for quantity. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 07:05, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Sorry. This is my first article from this period of TOTJ, and its must less straightforward than the noms from Golden Age of the Sith or Fall of the Sith Empire. Some problems are to be expected, I guess.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 05:55, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Hey Floyd, no hard feelings whatsoever. I'm glad that you are working on the TOTJ articles and thoroughly appreciative. I'm just hard on you because you are an Inquisitor as well as an experienced article writer, and such mishaps should be beyond you at this point. WP:TOTJ is and has been known for the quality of its articles, and as the project lead, I want to maintain that reputation. Others have been just as hard on me for the same reasons, and it forced me to get better. We all make mistakes from time to time so it's not the end of the world. You do a great job here; keep up the good work. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 01:36, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Wishing everyone a happy new year! :D SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 13:07, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks. :)  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:37, January 1, 2010 (UTC)

Matchstick

 * Nominated by:-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 16:41, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A cleaned-up clone

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Support

Object
 * 1) Grammar issues still remain, to say the very least. I also hoped you've checked all sources for information.  CC7567  (talk) 17:21, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Well I don't know what all of the sources are. I did recheck my sources.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 17:57, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **If you don't know what sources there might be, you can ask someone who is more familiar with TCW sources. You're missing at least the Star Wars: The Clone Wars: The Official Episode Guide: Season 1, and you'd do well to check it for info.  CC7567  (talk) 18:31, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Okay I took a look and what I saw really didn't help but than again it wasn't a full, hard copy. I added it as a source.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 19:57, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****For sources, be sure to double check the episode guide and its commentary, the TCW TCG cards, both visual guides, and possibly you can take a look within the The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia. I also do believe that Matchstick appeared briefly within the Wii game Star Wars: The Clone Wars: Lightsaber Duels, which I also have and can catch for you.  JangFett  (Talk) 20:34, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *****Okay well I don't have any of those books or that game so that could be a problem JangFett. I'll work with what I have. Oh yeah, what is the TCW TCG? I haven't seen anything pertaining to that.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 20:42, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ******The Clone Wars Campaign Guide. I still recommend that you either get your hands on an actual copy of The Official Episode Guide or contact someone that does because that's the only way to confirm that there isn't any info missing.  CC7567  (talk) 22:01, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *******In the Star Wars PocketModel TCG article, you'll see two links that say "Clone Wars" and "Clone Wars Tactics". Both are TCW-related, and should have something about Matchstick. To see each individual card, you can refer to this website: . And yes, I'll check Lightsaber Duels for you.  JangFett  (Talk) 12:21, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ********Okay, I checked and the closest I could find was Matchsticks Y-wing which was of no help. Thank you for your help. I greatly appreciate it! Oh and CC, I checked a shelf copy of that book and I don't think I am missing anything.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 03:00, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Attack of the Clone
 * 11) * Please continue to check your grammar. This should be the issue of least concern in all nominations.
 * 12) * I would recommend to read all other clone FA and GAs to see if you're missing anything.
 * 13) * "due to the breaking of procedure": what "breaking of procedure"?
 * 14) **This still remains. I'm striking all other objections and will review them later once other reviewers are finished.  CC7567  (talk) 22:00, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) * How is Grievous at all related to the Malevolence?
 * 16) * Please make sure that every single detail in the article is directly relevant to Matchstick and shorten or remove whatever is not.
 * 17) **You told me in my last GANom that I had to have backround info.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:19, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***That does not mean simply summarizing the comic. If you need help on this one, I recommend reading any of the current character GAs.  CC7567  (talk) 22:24, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****I looked at a very similar article (one that you worked too) and it follows what I did.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 23:58, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *****Is anyone out there? Nobody has made a move for a while.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 21:40, January 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) * The Neebray did not "inhabit" the nebula.
 * 22) * "During this, Matchstick's fighter was damaged but he downplayed the damage across Koon, as the mantas did not cause any casualties apart from an astromech droid." Please check your grammar and somehow rephrase this to correctly use English idoms.
 * 23) * Check your linking for both overlinking and lack thereof.
 * 24) * I'm almost certain that you can use more quotes in this article.
 * 25) *More to come.  CC7567  (talk) 03:12, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) **I can not find "due to breaking of procedure" in this article. I advise that you look at the article name first. What are the Neebray doing there if they are not inhabiting the nebula? Grievous was the commander of the Malevolence at that time.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 03:33, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) ***Please look more closely (and look exactly what you should be searching for) instead of assuming that I'm reading the wrong article. Also, if I'm asking a question in an objection, that means that it's unclear in the article, not that it's a factual question. You should therefore be clarifying it in the article instead of replying to me with the answer here. For the Neebray issue, you can find the answer by rewatching the episode; it's stated quite clearly there.  CC7567  (talk) 03:52, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) ****There. I believe I have fixed your problems. Also, in my last GANom attempt, you said that I needed to provide backround information and to write the article for a reader who only knew the 6 movies and their canon. I am simply following your teaching.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 21:44, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) Fett
 * 30) * In the infobox, "Rise of the Empire era" should not be sourced to the clone troopers databank entry, but rather the TCW novel instead. I corrected this, but please be aware of this.
 * 31) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) * As for the rest of the infobox sourcing, you need to go back and make sure everything is properly sourced. I am seeing certain information in the infobox that should not be sourced to the clone troopers db entry. The only correct sourcing I see so far is the era, homeworld, and and death listings.
 * 33) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) * "During the Balmorra Run, Matchstick's bomber was damaged by a Neebray manta" During the Balmorra Run? That isn't factually correct. The Balmorra Run was a hyperspace lane (TCW created canon), and not a type of "run" (i.e Kessel Run). You may say the group took the hyperspace lane as a shortcut to out run the Malevolence, but in your own words of course. Also, the Balmorra Run also goes into the Kaliida Nebula.
 * 35) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) * There is a huge time gap between "During the Balmorra Run.." and the previous sentence. You fail to mention about Skywalker's plan (the meeting onboard the Resolute) or any relevant information regarding it. Right now, it sounds like the group took the new Y-Wing bombers and set off to join something called the "Balmorra Run". Please correct this.
 * 37) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 38) * "After coming out of the Kaliida Nebula, Shadow Squadron engaged the Malevolence and their Vulture droids." Whose Vulture droids? By saying "their" is the Malevolence a group or a warship? Quite confusing for the reader.
 * 39) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 40) * "When the massive warship fired its ion cannon on the squadron, Matchstick's bomber's engines failed and he collided with fellow pilot Tag's Y-wing, killing both pilots and their gunners." So his starfighter was "destroyed" because of the ion ray? No, the ion ray cannot destroy an enemy starfighter, but disable it. You fail to mention about Skywalker's order to fly over the edge of the ray. And while Matchstick was doing so, his engines failed, due to the damage and stress it was enduring. The damage was caused by that Neebray.
 * 41) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 42) * In the intro, context on Grievous.
 * 43) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) *That's it for now. Please go back and correct these intro issues. Also, here's a tip to addressing objections: please make comments below each objection. It's quite easier for the objector to make comments and see what's done and not.  JangFett  (Talk) 01:59, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) **"After taking the bombers to Skywalker's flagship, the Venator-class Star Destroyer Resolute, Matchstick and Shadow Squadron were briefed by Skywalker and Admiral Wulff Yularen, the commander of the Resolute. Skywalker explained the plan of destroying the bridge tower of the Malevolence with the bombers in order to kill Confederate General Grievous, the commander of the Malevolence. Shortly thereafter, Yularen reported that Grievous had attacked a Republic medical convoy at Ryndellia. Since Ryndellia was near the Mid Rim planet of Naboo, and that Grievous had previously attacked a medical convoy, Skywalker concluded that Grievous' next attack was the Kaliida Shoals Medical Center. This facility contained over 60,000 injured clone troopers. Departing from the Resolute Master Plo Koon and Shadow Squadron followed Skywalker along the nearby Balmorra Run. This shortcut promised arrival at the medcenter before the Malevolence."
 * 46) **"As the ion cannon's ray approached the Republic squadron, Skywalker immediately ordered his fighters to head for the top edge of the ray, to avoid being neutralized. Despite the attempts of Shadow Squadron to evade, the ray deactivated three Y-wing bombers, as well as most of the Vulture droids. During the Squadron's evasive manuever, Matchstick's engines failed, causing his fighter to collide with fellow pilot Tag. The ships exploded killing both pilots and their gunners."
 * 47) ** Please take a detailed look at this article and its infobox please.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 21:15, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ***RC 1138, I can only say that you must refer to other clone trooper GAs to get a sense of what sources should be listed in the infobox. His hair, eye, species and gender should be sourced to the episode, not the db entry. His height is the only suitable clone trooper db source. And as for the bio, if you say that he is the clone of Jango Fett, then that should be sourced to the db entry as well. Also, again, please make comments directly below each objection.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:41, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) ****Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Added GAnom. ;)  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  16:42, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Added link to his entry in the CUSWE.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:22, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

The Clone Wars: The Valley

 * Nominated by:  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 02:41, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Wow, this one was empty.

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Support

Object
 * 1) Before I even begin, you are missing sourcing in the infobox and BtS. The intro needs expanding. Please refer to TCW comic GAs to get a sense of what needs to be added in TCW comic OOU articles, i.e The Clone Wars: Procedure, The Clone Wars: The Fall of Falleen, The Clone Wars: Cold Snap, The Clone Wars: Transfer, and The Clone Wars: The Dreams of General Grievous.  JangFett  (Talk) 02:46, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Roger roger!  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 14:33, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Xd
 * 4) * Serious underlinking in plot. -- Xd1358  Talk 17:42, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Roger roger!  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 03:08, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Captain Typho goes to investigate, and finds three B1 battle droids.. You forgot the tactical droid.
 * 7) * and the unreliability of the sensors in the valleys may have fooled the sensors what?
 * 8) * spots two B1 battle droids on STAPs and a B1 on a Flitknot speederbike. You forgot the tactical droid here as well.
 * 9) **This one still remains.
 * 10) ***Changed to spots two B1 battle droids on STAPs and a B1 on a Flitknot speederbike, along with a tactical droid.
 * 11) * Captain Typho contacts Queen Neeyutnee and Sio Bibble via hologram. Who is Bibble?
 * 12) *The Valley explains why Senator Amidala was on Naboo during the events of Blue Shadow Virus. What Blue Shadow virus?
 * 13) **Added clarity. It's a Clone Wars episode.
 * 14) * Xd1358 Talk 07:15, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Roger roger!  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 14:38, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * Plot: Who is Bow and Chrin.
 * 17) **Added clarity.
 * 18) * Intro: Underlinking, check again. Xd1358  Talk 11:14, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **I think I got it.  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 16:27, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * That sentence Suddenly, a security officer spots two B1 battle droids on STAPs and a B1 on a Flitknot speederbike, along with a tactical droid. is still pretty unclear. According to this image, there was no B1 on the speeder bike.
 * 21) **Fixed.
 * 22) ***"Chrin shoots the speederbike with a missile launcher; it and its pilot are immediately destroyed." The following sentence still implies there were two passengers on the speederbike.
 * 23) ****Fixed.
 * 24) * The droids are destroyed, and Senator Padmé Amidala is called back to Naboo to help. So, the droids are destroyed and she is called back. Nothing else? Xd1358  Talk 16:33, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **Unfortunately, nothing else. The comic ends there.

Comments

Kebla Yurt

 * Nominated by: SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:58, January 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: None.

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Support
 * 1) One vote for Kebla Yogurt. Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:20, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:08, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farlstendoiro. Must be a typo, but I object:
 * 2) * Bio: During the siege, Kurt housed Taris Holofeed reporters Who's Kurt? A different person? Or did you mean Y urt? Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:08, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **It was a typo. Addressed. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:46, February 1, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Man this one was complicated. I could so easily have missed things in this article. Trying to figure out what was canon and how everything fit together was difficult. Who would have thought that doing a seemingly completely unrelated quest (Bendak Starkiller) would lead to changes in her responses? Only just managed to catch that one while reading through the equipment emporium article. I hope there aren't others like this... SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:58, January 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Not an actual objection, but unless someone explicitly calls her "human", shouldn't she be listed as "humanoid"?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:51, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well the precedent created by other GA's of the project seems to be that we consider them to be Human. They look Human, use the Human game model etc. Examples include Dillan, Riiken, Rukil, and Trask Ulgo. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:08, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * Issue is being discussed in SH ATM. Going to wait for the discussion to develop before I change anything. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:38, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * It seems we've decided that as long as they look Human and there is no reason to doubt it, we should assume that they are. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:59, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

Ashka Boda

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 07:28, January 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Less than 75 words short of a FAN. Oh well.

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Support
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 17:15, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:09, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:47, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Attack of the Clone
 * 2) * "Boda joined forces with Jedi Knight Halagad Ventor to form a network of Jedi who survived the destruction of the Almas Academy": the network was formed and then survived the destruction, or the other way around? Please clarify; the tense is unclear here.
 * 3) **Clarified.
 * 4) * "Jedi Master Tionne Solusar uncovered the truth about Ashka Boda's fate long after Palpatine's death": I'm unsure specifically to which "death" you're referring to, but nevertheless, can it get a link?
 * 5) **Clarified and linked.
 * 6) * Is there any chance that the second paragraph of the Bio can be shortened? Remember, an article should only detail what is directly relevant to its subject.
 * 7) **Shortened and added on to the following paragraph.
 * 8) * Could you perhaps try to sub-section the bio between his actual biography and his legacy?
 * 9) **Sub-sectioned.
 * 10) * Any relevant images?
 * 11) **Added an image of the Tedryn Holocron.
 * 12) *Other than that, nice work.  CC7567  (talk) 21:25, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks for the review! Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 23:56, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) * Why was the Emperor "dying"? Can more context be given here?
 * 15) **Contextified.
 * 16) * Yes, I do realize that this wouldn't be much, but can a P&A section be created that at least says that he had the abilities to become a Jedi Master, as there is a level of skill and proficiency required to take the title?  CC7567  (talk) 07:35, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Added. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 15:43, February 1, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Absolutely no info for a P&A. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 07:28, January 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * So then you should add the one sentence you do have for a P&A in the P&T. It's perfectly acceptable to do so in situations like this. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 06:06, February 2, 2010 (UTC)

Bogga

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:06, January 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I wrote this article while listening to Push it to the Limit. I now have that song memorized, and I think my life is better for it.

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Support
 * 1) —Tommy 9281  Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 18:37, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Not a merciful vote at all. Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:39, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Blacklist:
 * 2) * "he leant a security crew..." What is "leant?"
 * 3) **Flerg. Meant to be "loaned"... I don't know how I messed that up. Addressed.
 * 4) * Your underlinking still knows no bounds.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * The first paragraph of Search for the Adegan crystals has too many different ideas jumbled into one paragraph. Please reorganize it so that like items are together and unrelated topics are separated, into different paragraphs if necessary.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * The grand sum to which Bogga refers is never stated to be credits in the source you have that statement referenced to, so either remove the link to Galactic Credit Standard or provide a source which explicitly states that credits are the payment Bogga expects to receive.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * More later. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:36, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) Farlstendoiro the [Un-]Merciful One
 * 12) * Intro: Add "also known as Bogga the Merciful One", or at least "self-styled the Merciful One", as it is a relevant title (used to negotiate with Finhead).
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * Intro: If Thon and Bogga had had any relevant encounter before Andur's death, mention it chronologically.
 * 15) **Its not stated if they do.
 * 16) * Bio/Search: Like all Hutts, Bogga was a hermaphrodite, but had a masculine personality. Sounds like all Hutts were hermaphrodite and all Hutts have masculine personality, which is false. Please reword.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) * Bio/Search: Again, if Bogga knew Thon before Andur's death, it should be specified chronologically, specially if they became sworn enemies.
 * 19) **It isn't stated that they had any contact.
 * 20) * Bio/Dealings: by Captain Gruna, captain of an... Can you reword it so you don't use "captain" twice in a row?
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * Bio/Dealings: Also, Bogga ordered Gudb to accompany them, giving him Mandalorian chains that could even a Jedi prisoner. I think there's a verb missing somewhere in this sentence.
 * 23) **Yeah. Fixed.
 * 24) * Personality: When agitated, the Hutt had a tendency to start sentences in his native Huttese,[4] and also often referred to himself in the third person.[5] Does he use the third person only when agitated or not? I suggest rewording this sentence.
 * 25) **Addressed.
 * 26) * BtS: Depictions of Bogga seem to be more than inspired in known pictures Jabba from ROTJ. Do we know anything about this? Did any of the artists used Jabba as a model?
 * 27) **That would be speculation, as there isn't any info about a connection.
 * 28) * BtS: Tsk, tsk... Who voiced Bogga in the audio drama? (Tip: Bud Thorpe)
 * 29) **Flerg. Addressed.
 * 30) *The Great Farlstendoiro is pleased with this article ·:P Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:56, February 3, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Rek (enforcer)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 03:14, January 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Quick little TOTJ article.

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) After some small changes. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:38, January 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Please watch where you link&mdash;I fixed five redirect links. Otherwise, looks good after a copy-edit. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 23:03, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) I echo the sentiments above. —Tommy 9281  Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 00:14, January 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 01:44, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 2) * "Suddenly, Nomi Sunrider cut Quanto in half and, as Rek drew his blaster, he was slain as well." - could you rephrase this, to make it clear that Rek was killed? Right now, the sentence reads like Quanto was cut in half and then killed as Rek drew his blaster.
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) *Not bad. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 14:41, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Nashiak Llalik

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:38, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: His sister is a GA now and he must be jealous. Hm... Not really; OS says little about his personality. But I wanted someone from Alliance Intelligence Reports

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Support
 * 1) Much improved. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:49, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Xd's quick look
 * 2) * Do not link in quotes unless the subject isn't linked in the body.
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) * Combine the intro's two sections.
 * 5) **Done. Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:14, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Xd1358 Talk 13:43, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * Per this forum, is he actually stated to be a human?
 * 8) **AIR, page 86, second-to-last line, specified by the omniscient narrator that writes the RPG stats. Btw, Sapph' is specified, too; CRO, page 63. Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:47, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Just wanted to confirm :) Xd1358  Talk 14:52, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) The Grand Master
 * 11) *Seeing grammar issues throughout the article.
 * 12) **Still seeing several grammar problems.
 * 13) ***Second attempt. Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:23, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) * The paragraphs in the bio are cut unnecessarily short.
 * 15) *The intro is rather unwieldy. It states some extraneous information (some of which really belongs more in the P&T), and also skips over some significant information from his bio.
 * 16) **This also remains. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:44, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) ***Second attempt. Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:23, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:06, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **Tried my best at all your objections. Have a look Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:39, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) ***All of Jon's objections combined with the complete lack of the 1stm tag give me the increased feeling that you were rushing to nominate this. Skippy, I've seen you do better than this and I'm sure you can&mdash;as long as you take the time to be careful.  CC7567  (talk) 21:59, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) Soresu
 * 22) * In his first days First days of what? Perhaps this would be more clear if you mentioned the venture beforehand.
 * 23) **Better?
 * 24) * obtained a degree being to of the class. Is this meant to be "being top of"?
 * 25) **Typo. Changed.
 * 26) * You seems to have mixed up the words in and on. In means inside, on means... I can't think up a proper definition :P Please check for mistakes.
 * 27) **Better?
 * 28) * There are more grammar mistakes than usual for your noms. Give it a thorough readthrough. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:00, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Tryin' my best. Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:23, February 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Sapphire (smuggler)

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:38, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I've been wanting to nominate a strong, Rebel, female smuggler for a long time. But Roget Jiriss offers too much resistance...

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Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:23, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Xd's quick look
 * 2) * As with above, combine the intro's sections.
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) * Could you also combine sections in the bio. It almost looks like a list right now.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Xd1358 Talk 13:45, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) The Grand Master's first look
 * 8) *Bio contains significant info that can be mentioned in the intro.
 * 9) **Better, but there's still some shuffling of information that should be done. It now contains some extraneous info, and I'm still seeing some stuff in the bio that should be mentioned in the intro.
 * 10) ***2nd attempt. Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:48, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) *I'm seeing some grammar issues throughout the article.
 * 12) **Better, but still seeing a few issues here. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:52, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) ***2nd attempt. Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:48, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 23:05, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Better? Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:54, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) Soresu
 * 17) * Big one: You have conflicting birthdates between the P&T, infobox, and body.
 * 18) **Changed. I'm bad at BBY-ABY algebra :(
 * 19) ***Hang on. 19 BBY? That would mea that she's 20 or 21 depending on birth date by 22 BBY, but you say she's 22 in the P&T. By my count, she should be born in either 20 or 21 BBY, once again depending on birthdate. I think we had a discussion about birthdate assumptions awhile back, but I can't seems to find it. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:11, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) ****Then, changed again. OS says she was 22 as of 2 ABY. Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:19, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) *****Lol just put an "or" in huh? 11:23, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) * Unable to join the Academy, Sapphire turned to smuggling It could be made clearer why he was unable. Was it because she was too disgraced, because she was, law-wise, banned for her parent's crimes, or what?
 * 23) **OS doesn't specify; not changed.
 * 24) * Sapphire hoped to find Tizzin. You haven't established exactly why she wants to. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:19, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **Motive added to 1st paragraph of bio. Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:32, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Saadoon-Kauldi

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:51, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "I told you I didn't want any new Hutt crimelord for this RPG book, but that doesn't mean you are entitled to use your AD&D knowledge and create a dragon crimelord"

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Object
 * 1) Where's the intro...=P  Xd1358  Talk 13:46, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *The dragon ate it :P Seriously: Added. Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:14, February 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) The Grand Master's First Look
 * 4) *The bio is extremely unwieldy; for its length it could use subsections, and, once again, why are there so many small paragraphs?
 * 5) **Tried to change bio and to mix paragraphs. Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:41, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *I'm seeing a lot of underlinking.
 * 7) **More links added. Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:41, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *"Details have not been revealed" sounds awfully OR/speculative & OOU.
 * 9) **Details were not revealed IU; only rumors. Anyway, changed. Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:41, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Also seeing some grammatical errors.
 * 11) **Hope some less now. Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:41, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) *"and became a spice lord and a crimelord, strangely basing his power&hellip;" Strangely is way too POV.
 * 13) **Changed. Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:41, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 14:40, February 6, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Added GAnom template.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 23:44, February 5, 2010 (UTC)

Xash

 * Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 03:46, February 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's been a long time, I shouldn't have left you, without a dope GAN to step to...

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Support
 * 1) No problems with the brother.  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  21:02, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:02, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * confronting a Jedi: a few things unclear here. The quote says that Xash wanted to take on Dray alone, something not mentioned in the bio or P&T.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Xash's sister continued to fight the Jedi, The quote seems to indicate that Xash was in a 1v1. If Sindra continued to fight, then why isn't she mentioned earlier? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:44, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, Soresu. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 02:10, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * The OS said "nearly a hundred feet" with regards to Xash being thrown into the tree. I added the "nearly" in.  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  21:02, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * No problem. Thanks again for the review. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 21:04, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Sindra

 * Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 02:54, February 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Twin sister and supporting nom to the gentleman above.

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Support
 * 1)  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  20:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Nayayen
 * 2) * In the intro, "She taunted him after knocking him to the ground". It isn't that clear who you are referring to here at first.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * What do you mean by "Force examination"?
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * "Sindra refused the offer . . . allowed Xash to duel him first." The clause at the end of this sentence doesn't make sense at the moment.
 * 7) **Reworked it slightly, see how it looks now.
 * 8) * The last sentence in the Bts seems rather irrelevant, is it really needed?
 * 9) **That was added based on some IRC objections I went through with an Inq for Thannor Keth, who felt that the information was relevant. Because Sindra is from the same story, I added it to her BtS as well. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 20:28, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Otherwise good. Just the sort of character I'd have thought you'd get around to at some point.  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  20:05, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **Really, why is that? Thanks for the review, Nayayen, please advise if anything further is required.
 * 12) ***You've promoted a fair few Sith-related articles so this wouldn't be an unusual article for you to write, I guess.  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  20:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) ****Ahh, I've become predictable. I see it's time to switch up my style :P —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 20:49, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Gula Dwan

 * Nominated by: Force-sensitive mercs ftw!
 * Nomination comments:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:02, February 6, 2010 (UTC)

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:18, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:51, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 08:30, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Nice reading. Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:50, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Surpassed how? In power? In Force knowledge? Explain this a bit better, please: "After he surpassed Dwan" Toprawa and Ralltiir 09:13, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:03, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Skirmish aboard the Coronet

 * Nominated by: Axinal
 * Nomination comments: My first attempt to seriously improve an article to GA standards. I'll appreciate any help I can get.

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Object Comments
 * 1)  Kryze Xd
 * 2) *This is what I saw when checking it quickly:
 * 3) * Combine intro into one/two paragraphs.
 * 4) **Finished with that, thanks. Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) * Too many subsections within the body.
 * 6) **Reduced from three to two. Do you think it should be just one?Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * Always refer to people using their last names after the first mention.
 * 8) **Fixed that, though I still use "the Duchess" in some places, and "Satine's guard" is used instead of "Kryze's guard," since the respective article is Satine's guard.Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) * Severe underlinking.
 * 10) **Fixed as much as I could find, but I'll keep looking. Thanks for your help.Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) *More to come. Xd  13:42, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Karika
 * 13) * Date in infobox needs to be sourced. Fine with me, if anyone could check TCW novel, thanks.
 * 14) **I'm having trouble with that. Aside from a definitive CW timeline as yet to be released, good Clone Wars articles like Battle of Nexus Ortai aren't sourced at all. Any pointers? Thanks.Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Another user sourced the date with The Clone Wars (novel). I haven't read it, so I'm not sure if it can be used as a source in this case. Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * Like Xd said, underlinking. Lightsaber, blaster, and blaster pistol are a few.  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 13:46, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Read the article over and improved most of the linking. I'll keep looking. Thanks. Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) Fett's preliminaries
 * 19) *Missing Ref tags in the infobox.
 * 20) **Everything in the infobox is sourced now. Is there still something missing? Axinal 19:45, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) ***Not to butt in, but the ref tags are still missing. Xd  14:44, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) ****Not at all. I guess I'm not really sure what a ref tag is. Can you give me an example? Thanks. Axinal 16:22, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ****Ref tags have now been addressed, though I'm not sure I quite see what the difference is. Thanks for your help!
 * 24) * The entire infobox must be properly sourced. Please take a look at other past TCW GAs to help you. Currently, the "c. 22 BBY" needs to be properly sourced. The episode or its guide aren't valid sources for this.
 * 25) **As I mentioned above, some good CW articles aren't sourced at all. Is there a reason for this, and do you know where I can find a proper source for the date? Thanks.Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) **Date was sourced with The Clone Wars (novel) by another user. Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) ***What do you mean, some good CW articles aren't sourced? Could you please point them out to me? Some articles aren't sourced, but that's just because they're not GAs/FAs, which have to be sourced.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:02, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) ****I'm not sure if "sourced" was the right word. Battle of Nexus Ortai has no references in the infobox, which I think is what JangFett meant when he said that "c. 22 BBY" needed to be properly sourced. Axinal 17:35, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) *****That article doesn't need sourcing because it's self-sourcing. If a subject (i.e, Battle of Nexus Ortai) doesn't appear more than once, it could self-source. However, any subject that's from the TCW television series, the film, or any related video game it has to be properly sourced because it appeared in more than one source. (i.e, information could be in the episode's Online Episode Guide, the video game's prima guide, TCW visual guides). For this battle GAN, you need to double check the episode guide and episode and make sure every detail is added in the article. That said, make sure "c. 22 BBY" is sourced to the TCW novel.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:25, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ******You can generally use "sourcing" and "referencing" interchangeably. :P  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:02, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) *******Ah. Thanks. :)
 * 32) *The intro needs to be merged into one paragraph, as it doesn't need to have three small separate ones. And you must include "around 22 BBY".
 * 33) **Finished there. Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) ***Missing something about the "Clone Wars".
 * 35) ****What do you mean by that? Do I need to specify that the skirmish took place during the Clone Wars? Axinal 19:20, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) * "As the Clone Wars escalated" is not a proper intro starter. We don't know when this battle took place on the timeline.
 * 37) **Fixed Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 38) * You don't need to have subsections within the prelude. Also, you're missing quotes for the prelude and each subsection of the bio.
 * 39) **Thanks, I'll get rid of the subsection. Do I need quotes for every subsection? The nomination rules says at least one quote is necessary, but doesn't require more than one. I'll keep working on that, though.Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 40) ***Added quotes to the two subsections under The Skirmish.Axinal 22:46, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) ****Added quote to the Prelude. Axinal 01:37, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 42) * Your BtS needs work too. Please take a look of some of the passed TCW GAs to help you. It's missing the original airdate, and I would remove that bit of trivial information as well.
 * 43) **I'll work on that, thanks. Axinal 23:01, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) *More to come.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:29, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) *Few more for now: Your prelude needs to be entirely fixed. Right now, it reads like a short summary of "The Mandalore Plot," which isn't how a prelude works. You need to describe what happened directly before this skirmish began.
 * 46) **I rewrote the Prelude, but I'm not sure how much can be done there, considering that the events of TMP lead directly into the skirmish. Axinal 19:45, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) ***"considering that the events of TMP lead directly into the skirmish." That's exactly what should be in a prelude.
 * 48) * "During the trip, the Duchess's ship was attacked by the rogue group Death Watch, aided by the Confederacy." Please be careful when you're talking about an organization. It's "the Death Watch" not "Death Watch". Also why are they "rogue"? Quite confusing. I suggest removing that bit from the sentence.
 * 49) **Fixed. Axinal 19:20, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 50) * "As clone troopers searched the ship for suspicious activity," What suspicious activity?
 * 51) **Fixed. Axinal 19:20, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) *" Using one of the probe killers, Kenobi revealed the traitor to be Senator Tal Merrik, who was in league with Death Watch" What did he do to reveal the senator was the traitor? Also, again, what do you think is wrong with this sentence?
 * 53) **Fixed. Axinal 19:20, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 54) ***"Using one of the probe killers, Kenobi revealed the traitor to be Senator Tal Merrik, the only one that the probe did not try to attack." Okay, but now it reads awkwardly.
 * 55) ****Addressed that. It's now more specific than I had intended, but it reads much better. Axinal 16:38, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 56) * "The Senator called for the aid of Pre Vizsla," Called?
 * 57) **Fixed. Specified to show that he contacted Vizsla via hologram. Axinal 19:20, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 58) * "In the battle that followed, the battle droids were defeated, and Merrik was killed by Skywalker." What battle? I'm confused here. There should be no separate battle other than the skirmish. Be careful here, as this will greatly confuse your readers
 * 59) **Fixed. Axinal 19:20, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 60) *Another review on the way.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:43, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 61) Toprawa:
 * 62) *Considering there's going to be a third part to this Mandalorian TCW trilogy thingamabob, if not more episodes, your "Aftermath" section is already going to need an update, which means this article fails to meet GAN Rule 5. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:17, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 63) **And just FYI to the nominator, this is why we don't recommend writing and immediately nominating articles on subjects that just came out in canon, like in an on-going TV program or an on-going comic. Because odds are the subject's development is not done, and there's going to be a new information that needs updating, which isn't good for an existing nomination or status article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:43, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 64) ***Yeah, I suppose I would have done well by waiting until next week. Thanks.Axinal 21:00, February 7, 2010 (UTC)

Kiefer

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:43, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first Legacy nom.

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 * 1)  JangFett  (Talk) 16:02, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Axinal:
 * 2) *Just a couple of issues from me. "He ordered that he surrender, as Krayt, who Kiefer considered the rightful emperor . . ." "who" should be "whom" in that case. Also, it seems like most of the first paragraph of the Personality and traits section seems to simply repeat what was already said in the biography. Axinal 01:39, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Removed a sentence. The last sentence of the first paragraph in P&T can be removed also if you really feel it's necessary.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 15:52, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Looks better. There's only so much you can do with limited information.Axinal 17:04, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

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Lyunesi

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 04:09, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My second attempt at this GAN, after having addressed those outstanding from its first attempt.

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 * 1) If my previous objections have been solved, there's no reason to not vote. WB, Eyrezer. Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:36, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Skippy and the objection from the 1st attempt:
 * 2) * In the galaxy: Any further information on Dinnid's death? The previous sentences suggest that the Shell Hutts were happy with Dinnid's services. Was he executed for some reason, or accidentally?... Wow, déjà vu. Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:25, February 9, 2010 (UTC)

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