Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterwards, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Zelka Forn

 * Nominated by: -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  15:54, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Doctor? Doctor Who?

(2 ACs/4 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 03:46, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Seems mostly fine now. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:08, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 17:33, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Good job.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 14:30, 23 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 10:24, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) LordDeathRay  (My Sith Holocron)

Object
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) * "After the destruction of the Galactic Republic, the main galactic government of the time, warship Endar Spire, individuals brought in several Republic soldiers who had been seriously wounded in the battle." Huh? Either something's missing or there's extraneous words here, because this doesn't make sense.
 * 3) * "Rakghoul this, rakghoul that": Rakghoul is inconsistently capitalized. Most notably, the term "[R]akghoul serum" is used at least once each way. I seem to possibly remember that Rakghoul should be capitalized, but I'm not sure if that is true or if my crazy brain is making stuff up. Which is correct?
 * 4) *I did a copyedit for you. Remember that the Ref template is only used in the infobox&mdash;you had it in the body, too, which I fixed. Otherwise, it's well-written and easily understandable for someone totally unfamiliar with that era. Good job. Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 04:47, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Alright, done. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  19:34, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Soresu
 * 7) * Benevolent is POV. Please remove.
 * 8) * Linking. Make sure everything is linked once in the intro and the body.
 * 9) * You begin too many sentences with Forn. Try using "he" instead.
 * 10) * Try not to use "grieved" twice.
 * 11) * After the destruction of the warship Endar Spire. Why and by whom was the Spire destroyed? Also, you haven't established where this event happened.
 * 12) * Despite the Sith government, the government that followed the Sith ideology, having an occupation of Taris, which could have seen him arrested and possibly shot, Forn agreed to heal the soldiers. He put a few of the soldiers in kolto tanks, healing medical tanks, in a back room of his facility. this doesn't flow very well. May I suggest something like Despite the fact that Taris was occupied by the Sith, which could have seen him arrested and possibly shot, Forn agreed to heal the soldiers, putting them in kolto tanks in a back room of his facility.
 * 13) * In the intro, you say that Revan killed a patrol to obtain the serum, but in the body, you say he found a corpse. Which is correct?
 * 14) * How did Revan discover the soldiers if they were in a back room? IIRC, he convinced Forn to show him the soldiers. you should probably add that some of them had already died.
 * 15) * Bts expansion. You need to add info about his appearance in KotOR as an NPC, his entry in the CSWE, whether it is possible to finish the game without doing the quest, and how he reacts if you give the serum to someone else.
 * 16) * The bts is too trivia-ish at the moment.
 * 17) * Is it actually essential to the plot that you meet Zelka? Can you actually finish the game without going into the medical facility? If so, then it would be unconfirmed as to whether Revan met him, and an extra bts note would be required. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:59, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Fixed, although no, Revan looked in the back room. I don't recall any sort of way for Zelka to agree to show him. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:47, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Soresu's second look
 * 20) * There are some previous objections you haven't taken care of. In future, put a message after each objection, to alert the objector to the fact that they are all done, and so that if there are any issues, they can continue the discussion. In this case, to keep it organised, I'll strike all the old ones and reiterate any that are still not addressed.
 * 21) * You begin too many sentences with Forn. Try using "he" instead.
 * 22) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:37, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) * How did Revan discover the soldiers if they were in a back room? IIRC, he convinced Forn to show him the soldiers. you should probably add that some of them had already died.
 * 24) **I don't recall any sort of way for Zelka to agree to show him.
 * 25) ***I'm pretty sure that you can persuade Forn into believing that you are a friend of the Republic. He then opens the door. The other way is to bash through the door of course. Instead of just saying he discovered them, you need to elaborate on how. One of these outcomes will have to be expanded upon in the body, while the other will have to go to the bts.
 * 26) ****Yep. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:37, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) * After Revan discovers the soldiers, he and Forn have a short converstion, the details of which should be added into the article.
 * 28) * Bts expansion. You need to add info about his appearance in KotOR as an NPC, his entry in the CSWE, whether it is possible to finish the game without doing the quest, and how he reacts if you give the serum to someone else.
 * 29) **You haven't added anything about the CSWE entry or his reaction of you give the serum to someone else.
 * 30) ***Okay. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:37, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) * Is it actually essential to the plot that you meet Zelka? Can you actually finish the game without going into the medical facility? If so, then it would be unconfirmed as to whether Revan met him, and an extra bts note would be required.
 * 32) **That was added in before hand; oddly, however, the article includes content however isn't showing anything beneath the first paragraph of the BtS. I'll talk to staff about that. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:37, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) * The bts is too trivia-ish at the moment.
 * 34) ** I didn't mean for you to delete that info, I was merely saying that it looked a bunch of facts in a list. The info should be restored and integrated into larger, more orgainsed paragraphs.
 * 35) ***Not deleted. Same problem. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:37, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) * This page currently is not categorised. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:02, 23 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) **It is categorized, but the categories are in the section not showing. By the time you're reading this, they should be fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:37, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) *Hm. Odd. Seems fine now. Alright, done. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  16:38, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) **I'll vote as soon as an AC review comes in. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:12, 26 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 41) * Last names after first mention, please.
 * 42) **What do you mean? -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) ***The first time you mention an individual, use their full name. From that point onwards, use their last name only. Using first names is seen as too informal for our encyclopedia. --Eyrezer 04:13, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) **Alright, solely referred to as "Forn" throughout. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  10:25, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) * I'm pretty sure things like "the South" when referring to the Upper City can be dismissed as game mechanics.
 * 46) **Addressed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) * "amnesiac Jedi Knight" doesn't quite cut it when referring to Revan. At the time, he was pretty much nothing in terms of being a Force user; I'd almost prefer that his Force sensitivity is left completely out.
 * 48) **Mhm. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 49) * "presumably killed" is speculation. Only say what is known.
 * 50) **Yep. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 51) * Taris has a "main city?" I thought Taris was a city.
 * 52) **Sorted. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 53) * Again, something like "no known family members" is out-of-universe and speculation.
 * 54) **Removed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 55) * Linking needs to be more thorough.
 * 56) **Hm. Could you point out generally where, please? -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 57) * Rakghoul disease needs context in the bio.
 * 58) **Done. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 59) * Second paragraph of the bio needs to be broken up; it's a mishmash of not-yet-converged storylines.
 * 60) **Yep. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 61) * How Shan was on Taris should be provided.
 * 62) **Provided. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 63) * "Which option Revan took was unknown, as neither results in a change of alignment. The nature of the conversation afterwards, unless Revan threatened Zelka, was such that it did not change the plot nor the character's alignment, therefore it's undetermined if Revan ever discovered the soldiers." – This is all pretty unnecessary. You can sum it up by stating that later sources which canonized the light-side path don't mention Forn or the medical facility.
 * 64) **Yep. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 65) * What exactly is meant by "one thousand and fifteen hundred credits?"
 * 66) **Whoops, addressed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  17:18, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 67) * Graestan ( Talk ) 17:14, 29 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 68) Bumrushin' the Show with IFYLOFD:
 * 69) * City of Taris? Do you mean the planet?
 * 70) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 71) * Sith government? Was it really a government? Better wording could be used here.
 * 72) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 73) * Give more information on the rakghoul disease in the bio.
 * 74) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 75) * Give more info on Revan and the circumstances of his amnesia.
 * 76) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 77) * Quote for the P&T?
 * 78) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  10:25, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 79) * IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:43, 3 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 80) Attack of the Clone
 * 81) * "In his standing and position as a doctor": redundant; choose one or the other.
 * 82) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 83) * "Forn would not refuse help to anyone, regardless of their homeworld, species, political affiliation, personality, or even if he hated them on a personal level": the last one stands out with the lack of a noun; please reword.
 * 84) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 85) * "medically help or assist": I reworded it to this, but "help" and "assist" are redundant, and "medically" also makes the wording awkward.
 * 86) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 87) * "and individuals brought in several Republic soldiers": unclear; what were the individuals' affiliation?
 * 88) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 89) * "even with the possibility of being arrested or even shot": unclear as to who he would be punished by, and the wording is a bit awkward as well.
 * 90) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 91) * Awkward wording that Forn was upset about the plague; try to word to something clearer.
 * 92) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 93) * "Revan arrived at Forn's facility and convinced him to show them the Republic soldiers, by declaring their loyalty to the Republic." Revan convinced Forn to show who the soldiers?
 * 94) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 95) * What information did Revan agree not to disclose?
 * 96) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 97) * "Although Forn was originally fearful that Revan would betray him, Revan proved him wrong." Sounds strange never mentioning this before; try to move it up. If it happens here, please make it clearer.
 * 98) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 99) * Why was Revan's alliance with the Republic a problem for Forn and/or his decision?
 * 100) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 101) ***Please check this again. Do you meant, "Allied with the Sith as he was, Revan was in favor of Forn’s choice."? Forn's choice was in favor of the Republic, and this wording makes it sound like Revan was allied with the Sith. Please clear this up.  CC7567  (talk) 07:39, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 102) * "Revan refused, however, believing Forn needed them more than he and his companions did." Please replace "them" with something more specific.
 * 103) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 104) * "even if they were an off-worlder, alien, or even if he hated them": same issue with the different elements not matching; please try to reword.
 * 105) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 106) * "Forn considered Revan's spirit very noble": builds too much off of each other using "spirit".
 * 107) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 108) * "for its work on making a Rakghoul serum before it was taken by the Sith": awkward wording.
 * 109) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 110) * "the light side choices are those chosen canonically": do you mean that "the light side choices are canonical"?
 * 111) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 112) * "Although canon dictates that the most light side choices would have to be taken": bit unclear; please check and/or clarify.
 * 113) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 114) * Are dark side points bad? It sounds like it from the use of "however"; please check.
 * 115) **Fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  07:29, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 116) * CC7567  (talk) 18:42, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 117) A little expansion on how Revan got Forn to show him the Republic soldiers would be appreciated. Wasn't there several dialogue options, or the option to bypass the door locks? -  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 14:45, 23 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 118) *Addressed in IRC. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 10:24, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 119) Toprawa:
 * 120) *Intro objections:
 * 121) **This needs better and more context. For example, when did he arrive? What year? Perhaps why is he arriving? Doesn't have to go into any great detail, but don't assume the average reader automatically knows what's going on: "When the former Sith Lord Revan, in service to the Galactic Republic after having his memory erased, arrived on Taris" Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:39, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 122) ***I rephrased this, simply because it seemed confusing. I didn't add the year however.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:59, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 123) ****He was not yet a Jedi at this point and there is no reason to say that he was a former Sith Lord because the person he was at this time was just a faceless soldier. I've fixed this in both the body and the intro. I've also added the year and contextified how he got onto the planet. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 08:02, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 124) Anyway, here's one thing I've got: "Despite an offer of a large deal of credits from the crime lord Davik Kang for the serum." However, in the body, it states that his assistant told Revan about Kang, rather than the crime lord actually ffering him credits.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:59, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 125) *Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 08:02, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * For obvious reasons, I'll withhold my vote until some feedback comes. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  15:54, 21 April 2009 (UTC)
 * You're not meant to vote for your own noms. We got rid of that in the GA system revamp. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:28, 22 April 2009 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

 * 1)  Only one unaddressed objection remaining, yes, but one that's been sitting here for over three weeks. This isn't getting a lot of activity, and unless there's something done soon, it needs to go.  CC7567  (talk) 02:35, 25 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *My bad; miscounted the weeks. It's only been two, but I still think it needs to be addressed soon.  CC7567  (talk) 02:48, 25 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Noticing Floyd's unaddressed objection, I'm going to have to reinstate my vote. With so many current GANs, the tolerance for inactivity is becoming lower.  CC7567  (talk) 04:53, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *I apologize; I've only just noticed Floyd's outstanding objection. Unfortunately, I won't be able to address it until Sunday afternoon, as I won't even be on site until then. If you feel the need to remove the nom then I'm dissapointed but I understand. If you could, however, give me a little more time, seeing as I didn't realize, I'd appreciate it. :) -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  06:42, 13 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) I'm reinitiating this removal vote. The article has once more fallen idle with outstanding objections more than 3 weeks old. Nominator has shown no continuing initiative toward this nomination. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:59, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Moradmin Bast
> JangFett  Talk 00:14, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Nominated by: <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Nomination comments: Quite solid work, One of the few outside TCW articles I've rewritten :P

(1 ACs/0 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:10, 26 June 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Floyd:
 * 2) * "Moradmin Bast was an Imperial Army general, subordinate to High General Cassio Tagge, and the personal aide to Grand Moff Wilhuff Tarkin aboard the first Death Star, and served as chief manager in the Death Star." Split these sentences up.
 * 3) **Addressed
 * 4) *"Though soon after, Bast was killed when the Death Star exploded near Yavin 4, after Luke Skywalker's proton torpedo entered the Thermal exhaust port in the Death Star." The "Though soon after" is rather awkward.
 * 5) **Indeed, removed that statement.
 * 6) * " Seated to the left of his superior officer, Tagge, the group of command staff stationed in the Death Star discussed the Rebel Alliance, and their victory in obtaining the Death Star plans." Is it really relevant where he sat?
 * 7) **Not really :) Removed
 * 8) * " Motti and Tagge argued about the Imperial Senate's continuous support for the Alliance, though with the intervention of Tarkin, he announced to the assembled command staff the Emperor's dissolution of the Imperial Senate. " Reword. It makes it sound like Motti or Tagge announced the dissolution of the Senate, although it was Tarkin.
 * 9) **Removed that comma and added a period before "Though".
 * 10) * Be consistent on your capitalization of the "Force".
 * 11) **Addressed
 * 12) * "During the Battle of Yavin, Imperial military analysts, who had been studying the Rebels' initial attempt to enter the battle station's northern polar trench, brought to Bast's attention." Brought what to Bast's attention?
 * 13) **Addressed and removed that statement.
 * 14) * "Bast indicated that the small thermal exhaust port was a potential danger to everyone onboard the battlestation. " Tell why the exhaust port is a danger.
 * 15) **Addressed. I stated that it was a entrance to the main reactor; I could say why it was a "danger" in a different sentence, but I don't want to get off topic.
 * 16) * "Though, the engineers stationed on the Death Star experienced slight difficulties, delaying the destruction of Yavin 4." Merge this with the previous sentence.
 * 17) **Addressed
 * 18) * "after one of his fighters bumped his own fighter, " Reword.
 * 19) **haha, Thanks for addressing this objection. Fixed, hope that works
 * 20) * "as well as all the Death Star's commendations," I don't think commendations is appropriate here.
 * 21) **Reworded
 * 22) * Is content of the Legacy section really suitable for Legacy? It's really just "There was a guy who looked like him."
 * 23) **No, removed. The mentioning of the lookalike is in the bts.
 * 24) * Quote for P&T?
 * 25) **The only major quote he said in Episode IV was the "analyzed the attack sir". I don't want to repeat the quote because I used it two times. I moved one variation of that quote to the P&T from the Battle of Yavin section.
 * 26) * "many of whom were also assigned to the Death Star included:" Reword, although I would prefer you cut the part about the other Imperial officers with the same facial hair out entirely. It's not very relevant./s>
 * 27) **Addressed
 * 28) * "The lookalike officer in the Holiday Special has not yet been identified, and his connection with Bast, if any, has not been explained, but it is known that is not Bast, and that Bast died in the Battle of Yavin." Split this sentence up, and the one following it.
 * 29) **Addressed
 * 30) * Watch your linking. Articles are linked to once in the intro and once in the main body of the article.
 * 31) **Fixed
 * 32) * IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:34, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) Mauser:
 * 34) * One thing is obligatory for all movie noms: check all adaptations. In your case: the novel, the junior novel, the Marvel adaptation, the Dark Horse adaptation, the Manga adaptation, the photo comic, the radio drama, The Rise and Fall of Darth Vader and possibly some others. Simply adding them to the appearances list is not nearly enough: you must check all of them for any new info and inconsistencies.
 * 35) **I completely agree, though I need to check if he was in the novel. I don't quite remember if he was in the 1976 and the most recent adaptions, but I will check. Bast wasn't identified until CCG, he was known by a different name/designation before the CCG. Death Star referred to Bast as "lieutenant".
 * 36) ***Fixed sources and references. Expanded bts as well.
 * 37) ****What about the Dark Horse adaptation and the radio drama?
 * 38) *****He was in the Dark Horse but not in the radio drama. Addressed.
 * 39) * A movie character with lines such as Bast is ought to have more sources mentioning him. Cards from Star Wars Trading Card Game and Star Wars PocketModel TCG are the first ones that spring to mind, but I'm sure there are a lot more. Even the sources, that are already listed, you don't seem to use. Where's the info from the Insider article, Star Wars: The Complete Visual Dictionary, Star Wars Encyclopedia for that matter?
 * 40) **I'll be adding more sources and I'll check those visual dictionaries. Hopefully the newer sources say he is Bast.
 * 41) ***Same comment in the previous objection.
 * 42) *Keeping in mind that those two objections are pretty major and will require a lot of time to get the sources alone, I'd say this article's chances of getting GA'd in the near future are slim at best.  Mauser  Comlink 10:05, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) **With respect, Fett, you should have done that prior to moninating the article.  Mauser  Comlink 13:18, 19 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) ***Though a article can change throughout the nomination.
 * 45) ****Will give a full review after the last two sources are checked.  Mauser  Comlink 10:59, 24 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 46) Jinzler
 * 47) * The sources list is not in chronological order
 * 48) **I'm aware of that; I'll be adding new sources soon and reorder them.
 * 49) * I may be wrong, but wasn't Bast's rank known only to be "Chief" until the release of Death Star, which confirmed that he was a general? If so, this should be mentioned in the BTS section
 * 50) **CCG referred to him as Chief Bast. Death Star was only "lieutenant". But I'll check the novel just to make sure.
 * 51) * I know that Floyd has suggested that you remove the legacy section but if you keep it, it could do with some slight rephrasing: Two years after Bast's death, a man who served onboard the Imperial I-class Star Destroyer Devastator resembled Bast - this seems to give the impression that the man only resembled Bast while aboard the Star Destroyer. It would perhaps sound better if you changed it to "a man resembling Bast served onboard an Imperial I-class Star Destroyer. Also you could perhaps add a bit more context to this and mention the Blockade of Kashyyyk
 * 52) *My favourite Death Star officer --Jinzler 23:30, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 53) **I agree :)
 * 54) Mauser strikes back:
 * 55) * Sources needs to be sorted by the order of publishment.
 * 56) **Addressed
 * 57) * Why have succession box, if he's the only person to ever hold such position?
 * 58) *Addresed
 * 59) * Context for the Death Star in intro.
 * 60) **Adressed
 * 61) * In the intro you use the words Death Star too much. Replace some instances with "battlestation" or something.
 * 62) **Addressed
 * 63) * Intro could be expanded.
 * 64) **I dont think so. The intro explains his rank within the Death Star, which is partly revealed in the DS novel. Then sums up his role in A New Hope.
 * 65) * No "remains unknown" is allowed.
 * 66) **Addressed
 * 67) *" either assigned or personally selected" - speculation.
 * 68) **Addressed
 * 69) * "He seems to have functioned well" - speculation.
 * 70) **Addressed
 * 71) * You describe all events in the conference room, though not all of them are relevant to Bast himself. Please re-check.
 * 72) **Addressed
 * 73) * Find at least one more image for the article.
 * 74) **Addressed
 * 75) * The image of Bast and Vader is from the very deleted scene you talk about. Therefore, it is not Bast.
 * 76) **Addressed
 * 77) * You say that Skywalker led a squad into the trench. Read the squad article and reword accordingly.
 * 78) **Addressed
 * 79) ***I corrected it myself.
 * 80) *More to come.  Mauser  Comlink 15:59, 29 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 81) Next round:
 * 82) *Infobox: you don't even say that he was a Human male. Same for the bio.
 * 83) **Actually, it was in the infobox but not in the bio. Added in the bio.
 * 84) ***Sorry, still can't see it in the bio.
 * 85) * "found a potential danger" - what exactly was the danger?
 * 86) **Addressed in the intro.
 * 87) ***The thing is, intro should be self-explanatory.
 * 88) **Expanded the meaning of it in the intro. But it is explained in his bio.
 * 89) * "Bast confronted Tarkin" - that wasn't a confrontation. Besides, you don't even say that he asked Tarkin to evacuate.
 * 90) **Reworded and expanded.
 * 91) * "Bast entered service in the Imperial Army and rose through the ranks" - what's the source for that?
 * 92) **Reworded, that section is sourced to the DS novel.
 * 93) * "Bast had no personal aspirations beyond serving the Empire, and was loyal to Tarkin and Tagge." - that belongs in P&T.
 * 94) **Addressed
 * 95) *Why did the Rebels run out of time?
 * 96) **Expanded
 * 97) ***Again, is that really relevant to Bast? Check the article TK-622 - it only mentions parts of the battle that were essential to his fate, no need to focus on Luke and vader instead of Bast.
 * 98) *Tarkin did not order Bast to fire the superlaser, of that I'm certain. The orders were to another officer.
 * 99) **I'm certain it was Bast and then Bast gave the order to the chief gunnery officer.
 * 100) ***I will double-check it soon.
 * 101) * The whole last paragraph of the bio with the description of the Battle of Yavin looks choppy. Check it again and leave only elements relevant to Bast himself.
 * 102) **Addressed and removed a section.
 * 103) * Expand P&T.
 * 104) **I merged that sentence in the bio in the P&T, though their is not too much information about him and I have listed what is seen in the DS novel and A New Hope.
 * 105) *In Holiday Special Bast's lines from the movie were re-dubbed, you should mention that.
 * 106) **Addressed
 * 107) ***Sorry, you misunderstood me. In the ANH deleted scene he and Vader had one dialogue, while in the Holiday Special it was replaced with a compeletely different one. It's explained in Star Wars: Behind the Magic.
 * 108) *  Mauser  Comlink 17:57, 2 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 109) Chack Attack:
 * 110) * Your sources are out of order.
 * 111) **Addressed
 * 112) * I'm currently working on Motti, and there ended up being a lot more P&T info than I expected (little tidbits from numerous sources). Are you sure that you can't expand the P&T for Bast? Going along with this, are you sure those are all the sources? I realize his role is less than Motti's but still, I'd think there might be a few more sources than shown here.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:57, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 113) **P&T expanded. I found very little information about Bast from that source, and he did have a rivalry with Motti. I added that in the bio, and more in the P&T.
 * 114) * You may be missing sources. Use Jaymach's site, and check sources like Galaxy Guide 1 and other sourcebooks which deal with that time period.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:54, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 115) **I looked through various of old sourcebooks, and Galaxy Guide and they had Bast, however, they only referred to him as "Chief".  JangFett  Talk 20:59, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments > JangFett  Talk 00:58, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Appearances go above sources fyi. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 02:10, 17 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Opps, must have missed that. Thanks for fixing that Trayus :) <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"

Iridonian

 * Nominated by: -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  18:48, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I is for Iridonian...

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 07:45, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 06:27, 8 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) * BTS: "Previously the term "Iridonian" was used to refer to Zabraks, but the description of their culture." Confusing to the point that it barely makes any sense. Please reword.
 * 3) * "Iridorian" vs. "Iridonian": The article uses both spellings, and it appears that "Iridonian" is correct based on statements in the BTS and on the talk page. I've fixed a couple, but you should look through the article yourself and fix the rest.
 * 4) *&mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 21:08, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Both have since been removed, due to being factually incorrect, so those are addressed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  12:55, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***The first one was expanded on by Mauser and has been struck. The second one, however, is not fixed due to Mauser's reversion; your best bet would probably be to wait a little bit and see if Tranner gets a response from Mr. Chee before fixing it, though I do feel that Mauser is probably right below. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 04:22, 11 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Alright, I've struck based on Eyrezer's fix and Mauser's point below. I was hoping to see an official response from Mr. Chee first, but it appears that such a response may not be coming. Let's move this nomination on, and if we do get a response from Mr. Chee, then we can work things out then. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 06:27, 8 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm pretty sure it's spelled "Iridorian" (which you use throughout the article), since "Iridonian" is used to denote Zabraks from Iridonia. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:13, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * See the BTS and the related discussion on the article's talk page. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 21:08, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * My point still stands. "Iridorian" is still used throughout the article. Additionally, since "Iridonian" refers to a type of Zabrak, this article should include information on Iridonian Zabraks. For all we know, the being in the main image may be a Zabrak under that armor. Either way, something's just not right - and unfortunately, there's nothing that can be done short of asking Leland Chee about it. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:05, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * My apologies, gentlemen. I forgot to check the name prior to the article's nomination, despite my own doubt that it was "Iridonian". That's now fixed. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg <span title="(Imperial Intelligence)" style="color:Black">(Imperial Intelligence)  12:54, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Alright, you redirected "Iridonian" to Zabrak and changed this nomination to "Iridorian," but Mauser has reverted your changes. So until this issue of "Iridorian" vs. "Iridonian" is resolved, this won't pass. To help speed this up, I've left a post on the "Holocron continuity database questions" forum on StarWars.com, asking Mr. Chee about this issue. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:21, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * To me the case is simple. We have 2 variations of spelling: from KOTOR game and Camaign Guide and we were that LFL considered the one from the game to be a misspelling.  Mauser  Comlink 13:38, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * In the meantime, I've semi-protected it for a month (which will still let most people frequenting this page edit at will.) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 03:38, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Refresh my memory, but I think we don't ordinarily include the Eras template on sentient species articles. (If we did include it for this article, the "Old Republic" era icon would be the one to use.) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 03:38, 14 July 2009 (UTC)

Remove nomination (AgriCorps vote only)

 * 1) Per Tranner's comments above, although I'm pretty certain it's "Iridorian." This is what BtSes are for.  Graestan ( Talk ) 16:36, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I rewrote the Bts today to, hopefully, make it clearer what is occurring in this article. Does that help? --Eyrezer 12:33, 30 July 2009 (UTC)

Broadside (clone)

 * Nominated by: --Clone Commander Lee 18:40, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My 2nd nom. Thanks to JangFett for the pre-perview

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support Object > JangFett  Talk 18:43, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 23:04, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 22:48, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  JangFett  Talk 04:42, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Missing quote in the bio. And if you can, add a quote in the P&T
 * 3) **Adressed.
 * 4) ***And the bio?
 * 5) ****I didn't found one.
 * 6) *****What about his quote/the Squadron motto from Shadow of Malevolence?
 * 7) ******Already the head quote.
 * 8) * Add another image in the bio.
 * 9) **I'll ask JMAS.
 * 10) ***Added.
 * 11) * "Kamino" in the infobox is missing a reference
 * 12) **Adressed.
 * 13) * P&T-"He also was used to bet with his good friend Matchstick about the outcome of their missions." Where does it say that Matchstick was is good friend? If you cannot find anything to back it up, remove it.
 * 14) **Adressed.
 * 15) * P&T-"He was proud of his squadron and quoted the Squadron motto in front of his Jedi commanders." Less colloquial. What Squadron motto?
 * 16) **Adressed.
 * 17) ***Not addressed. What I mean is add his line from Shadow of Malevolence.
 * 18) ****Which line ?
 * 19) *****The motto is fine. But change Jedi Commanders to Skywalker, since he addressed Broadside.
 * 20) ******Fixed.
 * 21) * Lee, your missing sources in the sources section.
 * 22) **Which exact ?
 * 23) ***Check the episode guide, the TCG Clone Wars card pack, Visual guides.
 * 24) ****Fixed.
 * 25) * Rewrite the entire B&T. Make sure you link it properly and explain his roles in both Procedure and Shadow of Malevolence.
 * 26) **Adressed.
 * 27) ***Nevermind, I did it myself. Source "Broadside was voiced by Dee Bradley Baker, who voices all of the clone troopers in The Clone Wars television series." to the episode guide.
 * 28) ****Fixed.
 * 29) *More to come Lee. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) You need to merge the first two sentences to make them flow better. More coming, perhaps.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:14, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed.
 * 3) Your sources section is completely empty. Please, address this before you nominate an article.  Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 06:38, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *Fixed.
 * 5) Fett's second look
 * 6) * "Skywalker ordered Broadside to "form up", as he was "drifting" out of formation. Broadside replied that it was due to the fact that the "bird needed a bit more work", at which Skywalker responded by saying that when he was done tuning them, the Separatist would not know what hit them." This sentence is quite confusing. For the "bird needed", does that mean his Y-wing? Context is needed then. I wouldn't say "Separatists" as a whole. Either "Grievous" or the "battle droids controlling the Malevolence ' s turbolasers" would work here.
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) ***What is the "bird needs work"? Context needed
 * 9) ****Fixed.
 * 10) * "But due to the dense defense fire Tano convinced Skywalker to aboard the plan and destroy the starboard ion cannons." What dense defense fire? This sentence is more aimed at the viewers poi. Yes, there was a lot of fire which convinced her to tell Skywalker that they need a new plan. Rewrite this sentence, however, try not to make it Ahsoka's poi, since the main focus is Broadside. Mention that she advised Skywalker that they need a new plan; but straight to-the-point.
 * 11) **Fixed.
 * 12) *<span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Mauser:
 * 2) * Need quote from bio. The one from Procedure should do.
 * 3) **Added.
 * 4) ***You're quoted it wrong, please re-check.
 * 5) ****Bad mistake. Corrected
 * 6) * Context on Fett clones.
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) * Context on Twilight.
 * 9) **Can't see it.
 * 10) **Fixed.
 * 11) ***Fixed
 * 12) * "Encountering resistance..." - what sort of resistance? You make it sound like they were under fire.
 * 13) **Fixed.
 * 14) ***I meant that the term "resistance" is wrong here. "Protest" maybe.
 * 15) * It was Matchstick who talked to the clone trooper, not Broadsise.
 * 16) *Fixed.
 * 17) * "...clearance required to enter the hangar. Broadside and the rest of Shadow Squadron departed the facility..." - one sentence they enter the hangar, the next one they depart from the facility. Clarify.
 * 18) **Fixed.
 * 19) * "Plo Koon asked Skywalker if Shadow Squadron was able to carry out the assigned task." - how is this relevant to Broadside?
 * 20) **Removed.
 * 21) ***Still: is that bit of conversation really relevant?
 * 22) ****Yes, I think so.
 * 23) * "Upon entering the nebula" - which nebula?
 * 24) **Fixed.
 * 25) * Context for Neebray mantas.
 * 26) **Adressed.
 * 27) ***Can't see it.
 * 28) ****Adressed.
 * 29) * You say that the Malevolence fired it's ion cannon at the squadron after the mention of Matchstick's death, though the events are related.
 * 30) **Fixed.
 * 31) * Check if he has a TCSWE entry. Also check the Clone Wars Visual Guide.
 * 32) **Checked.
 * 33) * The whole article reads too much like a straight line of sentences, many of which begin with no apparent connection with the previous ones. Use words like "Later", "Soon", "Shortly after" more often.
 * 34) **Fixed.
 * 35) ***Only see a couple of instances. You need to check the flow of the prose for the entire article, because I will be coming after it anyway.
 * 36) ****Fixed.
 * 37) * Serious underlinking. You need to link to articles like Battle of the Kaliida Nebula, Starfighter combat, death and many others.
 * 38) **Fixed.
 * 39) ***No. Not by a long shot. You don't link to Kaliida Nebula, Battle of Ryndellia, Bantha formation etc. Check the entire article and link as many subjects as you can, especially relevant ones.
 * 40) ****Fixed.
 * 41) *Definitely more to come.  Mauser  Comlink 11:00, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) Mauser redux:
 * 43) * No source says he was born in 32 BBY.
 * 44) **Removed.
 * 45) * Context for Grievous. Both intro and the body.
 * 46) **Fixed.
 * 47) * Intro: what med center?
 * 48) **Fixed.
 * 49) * Context for Bormus Testing Facility. Both intro and the body.
 * 50) **Fixed.
 * 51) * You need to source 22 BBY with the Clone Wars novel.
 * 52) **Fixed.
 * 53) * Why was Skywalker hunting Malevolence? Also, context for the ship.
 * 54) **Fixed.
 * 55) * What was the Gran worker protesting against?
 * 56) **Fixed.
 * 57) * "Skywalker ordered Broadside to "form up" with his bomber..." - form now on and the to the end of the paragraph you're basically repeating the dialogue. Find a way to present it in a form more accessible to readers.
 * 58) **Fixed.
 * 59) ***Cut unnecessay info myself.
 * 60) * Context for Resolute? Yularen? Plo Koon?
 * 61) **Fixed.
 * 62) * Intelligence didn't report about the battle of Ryndellia, Yularen did!
 * 63) **Fixed.
 * 64) * "Because Ryndellia was near the Mid Rim planet of Naboo, Skywalker concluded that Grievous next attack aim was the Kaliida Shoals Medical Center" - can't make any sense out of it.
 * 65) **Background info.
 * 66) ***I mean how did he conclued the fact. Check the episode, there's a bit more info there.
 * 67) ****Fixed.
 * 68) * Okay, Skywalker concluded Grievous' next target. The next thing you know, they are already departing from Resolute. You're missing the connection between events.
 * 69) **Fixed.
 * 70) * "Shadow Squadron, along with Plo Koon" - uhm? At least mention that he was in his Delta-7B.
 * 71) **Fixed.
 * 72) * What's the conenction between the Balmorra Run and the Kaliida Nebula?
 * 73) **Fixed.
 * 74) * Context for Kaliida Nebula.
 * 75) **Fixed.
 * 76) * "During this..." - during this what?
 * 77) **Fixed.
 * 78) * "Matchstick's fighter was damaged..." - I though they were bombers.
 * 79) **Fixed.
 * 80) * "By this time, the medical center..." versus "Shortly after arriving at the Medical Center..." - so, is it capitalized or not?
 * 81) **Fixed.
 * 82) ***Still remains as it was.
 * 83) ****I don't really understand this objection.
 * 84) *****One sentence the words "Medical Center" are capitalized, the next one - they aren't. Choose one standard way.
 * 85) ******Fixed.
 * 86) *<S>Generally: you need a better description of the battle.
 * 87) **Adressed.
 * 88) ***Still need to expand. Refer to the episode itself or to Battle of Kaliida Nebula if needed.
 * 89) ****Expanded.
 * 90) * "Soon the battle droids, stationed in the Malevolence, fired..." - they fired themselves, Grievous didn't order them?
 * 91) **Fixed.
 * 92) * "the warship's starboard ion cannon" - okay, now we learn that that the warship had an ion cannon. You should give a better description of the Malevolence much earlier on.
 * 93) **Fixed.
 * 94) * You don't even mention that the ion cannon formed a ray and that the squadron tried to evade it.
 * 95) **Fixed.
 * 96) * "In battle, Matchstick's Y-wing engines failed" - it wasn't in battle, it was when they were evading the ray.
 * 97) **Fixed.
 * 98) * "Even after this, Shadow Squadron continued their" - makes little sense, you didn't mention earlier that a full squadron was required for the mission.
 * 99) **Fixed.
 * 100) * "Malevolence droid gunner's fire" - it was just one droid gunner then, right?
 * 101) **Fixed.
 * 102) * "abort the plan and destroy the starboard ion cannons" - and what would they accomplish by that?
 * 103) **Fixed.
 * 104) * By the way, you do not say that the whole objective of the attack was to kill Grievous on the bridge.
 * 105) **Fixed.
 * 106) * "Shadow Squadron managed to destroy the cannons, using their Y-wing's proton torpedoes." - no, they damaged it and it blown up when fired.
 * 107) **Fixed.
 * 108) * "After saving 60,000 clones in the medcenter" - saving from what? You don't even say the station was under attack.
 * 109) **Fixed.
 * 110) *<S>Maybe you should say that the attack on the Malevolence continued, after all?
 * 111) **Fixed.
 * 112) ***Can't see it.
 * 113) ****Added.
 * 114) *****No, it is not.
 * 115) ******Finnaly added.
 * 116) *******Where? I still can't see it!
 * 117) ********In the midle of the Battle section Shadow Squadron continued their assault.
 * 118) **********Ah, there's the problem - we misunderstood each other. You should say that after the Squadron crippled the Malevolence, the Venators continued the pursue of the ship.  Mauser  Comlink  14:43, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 119) ***********Fixed. --Clone Commander Lee 15:42, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 120) * "answering on the question of destroying the Malevolence with yes." - very sloppy, reword.
 * 121) **Fixed.
 * 122) *"He was also would face superior officers when his commanders ordered him." - what makes you think that trooper was superior to him?
 * 123) **It was a commander. He had yellow markings.
 * 124) ***Not all commanders have yellow markings. Not all clones with yellow markings are commanders.
 * 125) *<S>P&T requires general expansion.
 * 126) **No more info.
 * 127) ***Yes, there is, you just need to come up with better wording for it.
 * 128) ****Well, it still works not good.
 * 129) * Expand BTS with information about the webcomic.
 * 130) **Which exact ?
 * 131) ***Who worked on it? Who illustrated Broadside? When was it published and where? All general info.
 * 132) ****Added.
 * 133) * More links! The Clone Wars: Procedure and The Clone Wars (web comics) should be linked in the BTS, the body also still requires more links.
 * 134) **Adressed.
 * 135) ***No more links except for those two examples. You need consictent linking, please double-check the entire article.
 * 136) ****Fixed.
 * 137) * Mauser  Comlink 09:51, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 138) **Should have catched them all. Thanks for the review Mauser. --Clone Commander Lee 11:55, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 139) Mauser strikes back.
 * 140) *" answering the question of destroying the Malevolence" - what's that supposed to mean?
 * 141) **Fixed.
 * 142) * Both the intro and the bio should say that Broadside was a nickname.
 * 143) **Fixed.
 * 144) * Context for Kaliida Shoals Medical Center in the intro.
 * 145) **Fixed.
 * 146) * "Even after this, Shadow Squadron continued the assault on the the command bridge of the warship. But due to the dense defense from the Malevolence's laser turrets, Tano advised Skywalker to abort the plan and destroy the starboard ion cannons instead in order to save the med center which was still under attack." - split the sentence.
 * 147) **Fixed.
 * 148) * Serious grammar and spelling issues. You need someone to give you a full copy-edit.
 * 149) **I'll ask someone.
 * 150) ***If I may butt in, Lee you should ask a AC member for a review sometime. Seeing that you have a couple of other noms, you should take care of this.  JangFett  Talk 19:23, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 151) Fett III
 * 152) * Add sections to the bio.
 * 153) **How can i do this ?
 * 154) ***Like this: ===Section=== Make sure you separate them evenly and give a specific name that is related to the proceeding paragraphs within the section. Such as Battle of Kaliida Nebula, ect.
 * 155) ****Added.
 * 156) * "...which was situated in the run" Context on "run", do you mean Balmorra Run?
 * 157) **Fixed.
 * 158) * I'm seeing a repetition of "medcenter". Try and vary your use of "medcenter".
 * 159) **Adressed.
 * 160) * "During the run, Matchstick's bomber was damaged by one of the mantas." How is this relevant to Broadside?
 * 161) **See above.
 * 162) * "Also, as the Squadron was evading the ray, Matchstick's Y-wing's engines failed and caused his fighter to collide with fellow pilot Tag's fighter, killing both pilots and their gunners." Again, this is not relevant to Broadside, but you can mention this but remove unnecessary details and mention his fighter was destroyed, but straight to-the-point.
 * 163) **See above.
 * 164) * A lot of details from the battle are irrelevant to Broadside. Try and remove minor details that aren't related to him.
 * 165) **See above
 * 166) *Lee, you're missing a sources section. Check the online guide, TCG Clone Wars cards, visual guides.
 * 167) **Sourced
 * 168) ***Lee, did you check the visual guide and Star Wars PocketModel TCG: Clone Wars? Their is a template for the TCG Clone Wars if Broadside has a card.
 * 169) ****He has no card.
 * 170) *****Then why would you put the TCG link in the sources section? Make sure you check before you add sources Lee. Did you check the visual guide?
 * 171) ******Checked and removed.
 * 172) * JangFett  Talk 19:23, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 173) **Checked.
 * 174) **Well Jang, Mauser advised me to expand the battle. So I did it. If you want to clear this, contact him. --Clone Commander Lee 10:49, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 175) ***I respect Mauser, but adding a lot of unnecessary details to the battle will get to play by play and would be centered around the fighters' poi instead of Broadside. I suggest that you remove any irrelevant details from the battle that aren't related to Broadside. For now, I'll strike my objections out. JangFett  Talk 15:42, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 176) Here we go again:
 * 177) * Context for Malevolence in the intro.
 * 178) **Added.
 * 179) * Intro: mention that Grievous was a Supreme Commander of the Droid Armies.
 * 180) **Adressed.
 * 181) * Intro: "one of the most important" - POV?
 * 182) **Fixed.
 * 183) * "Skywalker then led the squadron into the space station to recuperate" - recuperate? They weren't sick as far as I know.
 * 184) **Fixed.
 * 185) * "Grievous ordered to fire the Malevolence's turbolasers at the departing frigates" - what frigates?
 * 186) **Fixed.
 * 187) * "After saving 60,000 clones in the medcenter," - I thought half of them were evacuated?
 * 188) **Fixed.
 * 189) * Once again: the P&T needs expansion.
 * 190) **Expanded.
 * 191) *" the online comic to Shadow of Malevolence" - what's that supposed to mean?
 * 192) **Fixed.
 * 193) * Any info concerning him in the Visual Guide?
 * 194) **Not more as alredy in the article.
 * 195) * Mauser  Comlink 17:50, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 196) **Got them.Thanks for the third? review Mauser. --Clone Commander Lee 18:10, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 197) ***Axtually, it was the fourth one by my count. Be aware, there's still a couple of objections left from the second one.  Mauser  Comlink 18:31, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 198) Attack of the Clone
 * 199) * Before I start my copyedit, there is way too much subsectioning in the article and not a good balance between paragraphs. Please standardize your paragraph length and balance out the images a lot better.  CC7567  (talk) 18:21, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 200) **Fixed.
 * 201) ***Lee, "standardizing paragraph length" means making all the paragraphs more or less the same size, not mashing them all together as you did. It currently looks like an unappealing wall of text.  CC7567  (talk) 21:21, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 202) ****Now better ? --Clone Commander Lee 11:27, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 203) Fett IV
 * 204) *"After saving 60,000 clones in the medcenter, Skywalker and the squadron landed inside the medical center for regroup" Are you sure they saved all clones?
 * 205) **Why not ?
 * 206) ***If it is a speculation, make sure you source it, otherwise remove.
 * 207) ****Adressed.
 * 208) *****Double check. You can read other articles such as Nala Se or the Battle of the Kaliida Nebula if you still having issues with rewording this.
 * 209) ******Checked.
 * 210) * The article is too subsectioned. Consider merging two of the sections.
 * 211) **Merged
 * 212) ***"Early Life" is too small to have its own section.
 * 213) ****Merged.
 * 214) * "Tano advised Skywalker to abort the plan and destroy the starboard ion cannons instead" No she did not. Ahsoka wanted Skywalker to reconsider his plan, and Plo advised that they should take out their ion cannon.
 * 215) **Fixed.
 * 216) ***Still remains
 * 217) ****Fixed.
 * 218) * "The ion cannons namely were about to destroy the Med Center which was still under attack." The ion cannon doesn't destroy targets, it eradicates their electrical energy.
 * 219) **Fixed.
 * 220) ***Still remains
 * 221) ****Fixed.
 * 222) * "Shadow Squadron managed to damage the cannons, using their Y-wing's proton torpedoes, and the cannons exploded when fired." ...What about the hyperdrive? When Shadow Squadron bombed the side of the ion cannon, it did not explode then. Grievous ordered the ion cannon to be fired, though due to the amount of damage, it overloaded and exploded. That caused the hyperdrive to fail as well.
 * 223) **Fixed.
 * 224) ***Still remains
 * 225) ****Fixed.
 * 226) * JangFett  Talk 18:24, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 227) **Got them. Thanks for the review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 18:39, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 228) More for now
 * 229) * "After the briefing, Jedi Master Plo Koon, who had discovered the Malevolence, asked Skywalker if Shadow Squadron was able to carry out the assigned task." How did Plo discover the Malevolence?
 * 230) **Fixed.
 * 231) * " During the run, Matchstick's bomber was damaged by one of the mantas." How is this relevant to Broadside?
 * 232) **Background info.
 * 233) ***Very Play by Play though Lee. I would remove this sentence because its not very important to Broadside's character. But I'll leave that up to you.
 * 234) * "Shadow Squadron arrived at the medcenter shortly before the Malevolence came out of hyperspace and approached the station" This needs clarifying. Who approached the station?
 * 235) **Adressed.
 * 236) * "Shortly after arriving at the Medical Center, Grievous ordered to fire the Malevolence ' s turbolasers at the departing frigates, that were evacuating clones." Grievous ordered whom? "ordered" here will not work, unless you state who he ordered.
 * 237) **Adressed.
 * 238) * "The ion ray approached Skywalker's fighter and he" This is more toward Skywalker's poi. Reword to make it a general poi.
 * 239) **Fixed.
 * 240) * " The ion cannons namely were about to eradicate the energy of the Med Center, which was still under attack" Sort of confusing to what was under attack. The ion cannon or the medcenter. Clarify.
 * 241) **Fixed.
 * 242) * JangFett  Talk 23:59, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 243) **Got them all and the from your previous previews. Thanks. --Clone Commander Lee 11:22, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 244) CC
 * 245) * Please reword the first sentence of the Bio; it doesn't flow well.
 * 246) **Reworded.
 * 247) ***I'm not seeing any change.  CC7567  (talk) 07:08, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 248) ****Fixed. --Clone Commander Lee 07:14, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 249) *****I fixed it myself, but I suggest you take a look at my edit. I believe that I was being quite clear.  CC7567  (talk) 22:48, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 250) * The Resolute isn't named in the episode; please find the source that does.
 * 251) **Sourced.
 * 252) * Please include something about Matchstick and Broadside's conversation before they departed the fleet. It's relevant.
 * 253) **Added.
 * 254) ***Lee, please watch your verb tense. You added the sequence in present tense instead of past tense.  CC7567  (talk) 07:08, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 255) * What were the Neebray mantas? They weren't the inhabitants of the nebula, and Koon stated it himself what they were. Please check the episode; I've removed your incorrect context for now.
 * 256) **Fixed.
 * 257) * Why is the Visual Guide under the sources? Broadside isn't explicitly mentioned there.
 * 258) **Removed.
 * 259) *There was a lot of inconsistent linking throughout the article, which I've now fixed, but please proofread more in the future. Articles are only linked once in the intro and once in the body, and please do not link to redirects. Furthermore, I've had to remove a lot of unverified information that was not attributable to the sources you provided. In the future, please make sure your information is legitimate before adding it to the article. I've changed the majority of the grammatical errors myself, as it would take an unnecessary amount of time for me to object to them and for you to fix them, but the only advice I can offer is to work on your English.  CC7567  (talk) 21:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 260) **Fixed. Thank yolu for your work CC. --Clone Commander Lee 06:42, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 261) QGJ
 * 262) *Give a little more context on how the Y-Wings were acquired, i.e. that Skywalker threatened the Gran to allow to take the ships. Right now you only say that Broadside and Matchstick entered the hangar, and that they left in the Y-Wings.
 * 263) **Fixed.
 * 264) *"However, the blast deactivated three of the Y-wing bombers, as well as most of the Vulture droid starfighters, and the engines of Matchstick's starfighter also failed while heading for safety, killing Broadside's friend" Several problems here:
 * 265) ***First. The way you connect the second part with "and" makes the whole sentence to read a bit awkwardly. I would suggest you to split the sentence or reword it.
 * 266) ***Second. How would the engine malfunction kill Matchstick? Unclear.
 * 267) ***Third. You say that Matchstick was Broadside's friend without establishing it earlier in the bio. It comes as a bit of surprise.
 * 268) ****Fixed.
 * 269) *That's all from me. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:33, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 270) **All fixed. Thanks for the review Qui-Gon. --Clone Commander Lee 17:37, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Lee, make sure you italicize ship names such as Malevolence.  JangFett  Talk 16:16, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Can you get a better picture for "early life and Bormus", preferably one that matches the text?  CC7567  (talk) 21:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)

Gor

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 08:46, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: First pet nom ever?

(4 ACs/4 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Mauser  Comlink 18:27, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Kreivi Wolter 19:22, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) This thing is called like John Norman's works. Thanks for not mentioning it. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:31, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:14, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 23:06, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 03:09, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  CC7567  (talk) 22:25, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 8)  Graestan ( Talk ) 17:43, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) About Grievous
 * 2) * Grievous wasn't Supreme Commander, he was a Supreme Commander of the Droid Armies. There is a difference!
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) * Grievous's and Gor's relation should be mentioned in Characteristics.
 * 5) **Now that it's biology and appearance, that information wouldn't really belong. Information that is largely difficult to write about in the first place, as it's never really concretely spoken of. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 18:00, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *--Kreivi Wolter 10:25, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Mauser:
 * 8) * I believe you've checked both the Visual Guide and Grievous Attacks for any unique info?
 * 9) **Yup. He's kind of a straight-forward guy.
 * 10) * IMO, Characteristics should really be Biology and Appearance.
 * 11) **Good call.
 * 12) *Not sure what esle to add.  Mauser  Comlink 13:26, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks for the review. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 18:00, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) IFYLOFD:
 * 15) * Quote for biology and appearance?
 * 16) **Will that work? Haha, there's not many quotes for this fella.
 * 17) *And that's it. Well done.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:42, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thank you. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 06:15, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Just one: could you make the battle at the end a little less play-by-play?  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 20:32, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) *I would, but I've already had to cut down some of the pbp. The character's whole life story is based off of that single fight, so that makes it difficult not to be rather play by play. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 20:36, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **Fair enough. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:51, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) I lied: one more thing :P. I think you should add a Behavoir section, per the LG for non- and semi-sentient species articles. This could possibly be merged with bio and appearance&mdash;such as "Biology and behavior", or "Behavior and appearance" (it's a new type of nom, don't be afraid to try something different)&mdash;or, if there is enough information, just give it a separate behavior section.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:51, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) *Does that work? There's really not much about his behavior other than "He was aggressive" so I added Grievous's reactions to Gor's death. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 22:47, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) Attack of the Clone
 * 25) * Is it "Roggwart" or "roggwart"? Both the episode guide and The Visual Guide claim the latter, and I'm not sure what we do for species capitalization (or if we even have anything on it).  CC7567  (talk) 03:30, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) **I noticed that too. As far as I've seen, all species are capitalized. I remember seeing somewhere that despite the fact that "Human" is commonly refered to with a lower case "h" in sources, Wookieepedia would capitalize the word. I'm using that same logic for now. If I'm crazy and the whole "human/Human" thing never happened, please, somebody correct me. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 04:49, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) ***There is a difference between sentient and non-sentient species. Not all species are capitalized. The trend seems to be that non-sentient species are not capitalized; see: Wampa. So, I have gone through and de-capitalized all mentions of the species. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:00, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) * "Confederacy of Independent Systems' cyborg Supreme Commander, General Grievous": that's a bit...excess context, wouldn't you say? Please try and shorten it.
 * 29) **Took out cyborg.
 * 30) * Please try and condense the details in the second paragraph of the Bio; yes, some context is needed for the setup of the battle, but this is rather a lot.
 * 31) **I have to disagree with you on that. That information explains why the Jedi were on Vassek, and by extension why Gor died. In addition, that paragraph only has three sentences not directly related to Gor himself, all of which provide necessary context.
 * 32) * If you're going to say that Dooku had to "reassess" Grievous's abilities, then you need to say why, but going with the previous objection, I'd recommend simply removing it.
 * 33) **Done.
 * 34) * Are you sure it was Gunray who went to the Vassek system and not the tracking beacon itself? I can't remember that being in the Decoded episode, which is what it's sourced to. To my knowledge, it's still unclear exactly how the beacon got to the moon.  CC7567  (talk) 04:57, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) **I'll reword this when I have more time. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 16:42, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) ***Good?
 * 37) ****I've reworded it a bit more; I still can't find any sources that said Gunray went to the Vassek system.  CC7567  (talk) 22:25, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) * Please vary "in order to". I would also recommend checking for redundant wording.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) **Varied "in order to". Please pinpoint the redundancies for me. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 07:54, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 41) * "and was one of the few creatures to which Grievous appeared to be attached" – Is this explicitly stated somewhere? It sounds speculative.
 * 42) **Well, his emotional response to Gor's death and his eagerness to see Gor upon his return was what gave it away to me. It's never concretely stated, but that is concretely how it appeared. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 05:52, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) ***And is therefore concretely speculation. Graestan ( Talk ) 00:03, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) ****See below. I gave in and threw it out. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 09:30, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) * "digitigrade" – There's enough Star Wars jargon in these articles without zoology jargon as well.
 * 46) **Outta there. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 05:52, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) * Graestan ( Talk ) 23:55, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 48) Toprawa:
 * 49) *Per the objection already made by Graestan, this claim needs to go. It's speculative and Original Research. This can easily be reworded just to say that he showed an attachment to the beast, etc. Avoid weasel words like "apparently" when writing articles: "and was one of the few creatures to which Grievous appeared to be attached."
 * 50) *Ditto here. Also, how do you know he was saddened? That's pretty OR: "The general himself appeared to be fond of Gor, seeking him out immediately upon his return to his castle and becoming both saddened and angered with his pet's death." Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:00, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 51) **I've removed both, but I have to say that the saddened and angered part it a pretty common sense-based assumption. Listen to his voice. He doesn't sound like that when droids are destroyed. Look at how he slams his fist down on the console after Gor's death. That's pretty good evidence that he was upset by it. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 02:28, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 52) **Actually, I've changed my mind. I don't feel saying "appeared" is weasle-ish at all. Because the fact of the matter is that it did indeed appear that way to the viewer. It's not original research because it's the obvious intent of that particular scene to show that Grievous has some kind of emotional response to Gor's death. I will, however, change the word "attached" because I will admit that it is a smidge strong for the situation. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 02:40, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 53) ***Oh fine I give in. I like how I convinced myself of that. I just can't decide whether to be defiant or cooperative. ;P

Comments
 * I haven't seen a GA or FA for a specific nonsentient character before, so I just did a characteristics section and put its' appearance information in there. A personality and traits section just wouldn't have applied.
 * A soundbyte of Gor's death scream might be nice. :P  CC7567  (talk) 04:57, 29 July 2009 (UTC)

Wooley

 * Nominated by: --Clone Commander Lee 17:32, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A minor clone trooper from Innocents of Ryloth

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 06:53, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  JangFett  Talk 17:20, 29 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * "Kenobi, Cody, Wooley and the rest of Ghost Company boarded the Crumb Bomber and other LAAT/i gunships and attempted to land in Nabat, but proton cannons attacked the Acclamator transports above, and Kenobi was tasked by Jedi Master Mace Windu with taking out the cannons to allow them to land." Run-on.
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) * Lee, like your previous noms, please watch for underlinking and overlinking issues.
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) ***No, I still see many unlinked subjects. droid, Nabat, Innocents of Ryloth are a couple of them.
 * 7) ****Fixed.
 * 8) * "Kenobi, Cody, Wooley and the rest of Ghost Company" Context on "Ghost Squadron".
 * 9) **Fixed
 * 10) ***It was not Wooley's unit. Ghost Squadron is a unit of 212th Attack Battalion.
 * 11) ****Fixed.
 * 12) * "Ghost Company then settled up a base. Shortly after Cody went with Wooley, Waxer and Boil to scout ahead. Cody and Wooley went to investigate the courtyard, and discovered that the Twi'leks were being held prisoner." Very choppy, also the first two sentences are fragments.
 * 13) **Fixed
 * 14) ***Read this Lee: "Ghost Company then settled up a base and shortly after Cody went with Wooley, Waxer and Boil to scout ahead." Improper English. Make sure you proofread what you write, and if it helps, read it out loud. Or it could be your use of punctuation that confuses the reader. I'll correct this sentence, but in the future, you should be able to correct your usage of proper punctuation. More specially: commas, semi-colons, and &mdash (&mdash;), which is used in place of commas sometimes.
 * 15) ****Lee, please rewatch the episode and find where they "scouted ahead". "Ghost Company then settled up a base and shortly after Cody went with Wooley, Waxer, and Boil to scout ahead."
 * 16) *****Fixed.
 * 17) * "After reporting their findings back to Kenobi and Windu, they moved out." Moved out where?
 * 18) **Fixed.
 * 19) * Lee, try and use translating words such as "soon", "then", "however", "though" in your sentences. Go back and correct this issue because it is difficult to understand what's happening chronologically.
 * 20) **Fixed.
 * 21) ***Along with the proofreading, double check to make sure your sentences flow together.
 * 22) ****Checked.
 * 23) * "After they freed Twi'leks attacked tactical droid commander TX-20, the Separatists in Nabat were defeated, and after the transports landed, the army headed to the capital city of Lessu succesfully reteaking the capital and winning the battle." Improper English, also they did not win the battle. Kenobi and his men destroyed the cannons, allowing Windu and his men land and organize for their run on the capital.
 * 24) **Fixed.
 * 25) ***What is the "army of Windu"? More specifically, you should say Lightning Squadron and Windu.
 * 26) ****Fixed.
 * 27) * It is not confirmed that all clone troopers were born in 32 BBY. Their homeworld is Kamino, though unless you can prove that Wooley was born in 32 BBY, please remove it.
 * 28) **Removed.
 * 29) * Lee, I strongly recommend that you go back and proofread this article because I corrected a lot of grammatical issues, spelling, and linking issues.
 * 30) **Fixed.
 * 31) * Only use tags in the infobox, not in the main article.
 * 32) **Sourced.
 * 33) * JangFett  Talk 00:58, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **Fixed. Thanks for the review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 12:22, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) ***No problem Lee. Remember to proofread, and double check your work. If you have a hard time with using proper punctuation, you can always look on google for guides; also you can look at the FA tutorials here. I'll give this another review soon.  JangFett  Talk 19:25, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) From the Council Chambers:
 * 37) * "After they freed Twi'leks attacked tactical droid commander TX-20,": Slightly confusing; I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say here.
 * 38) **Cleared.
 * 39) * Can you split the last paragraph of the bio into two or three separate ones?
 * 40) **Splitted.
 * 41) * The BTS needs a little expansion, primarily context on "Innocents of Ryloth".
 * 42) **Expanded.
 * 43) *Otherwise looks good after a copyedit and some ref cleanup. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 03:48, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) **Got them all. Thanks for the review Master Jonathan. --Clone Commander Lee 06:39, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) Fett II
 * 46) * "Then, Cody and the Company created a diversion, while Kenobi, Waxer, and Boil freed the prisoners and also managed to take out the rest of the proton cannons." This sentence needs clarifying. What was the diversion?
 * 47) **Cleared.
 * 48) *Good work Lee  JangFett  Talk 16:58, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 49) **Fixed. Thanks for the review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 17:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 50) Attack of the Clone
 * 51) *While I would normally correct these myself, I feel that addressing these objections will help you learn the expectations of a GA.
 * 52) * "After reporting their findings back to Kenobi and Mace Windu, they moved out." Who was Windu? Who were "they"?
 * 53) **Fixed.
 * 54) ***When I'm asking who Windu was, I'm asking for context on him in the intro.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 55) * Everything after that sentence in the intro lacks coherency, and there's too much detail not related to Wooley. Please try to reword and shorten it.
 * 56) **Shortened.
 * 57) * Please watch linking, especially to redirects. This is something that you can fix yourself.
 * 58) **Adressed.
 * 59) * Ghost Company comes out of nowhere in the body and is not clarified in relation to Wooley.
 * 60) **Fixed.
 * 61) ***Saying that it's "Wooley's unit" is simply pointless and too confusing when it comes this late. Please move it earlier, as in when the 212th is first mentioned.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 62) ****Fixed.
 * 63) *****Please watch linking, Lee. No matter if you move around text, articles still need to be linked the first time they are mentioned.  CC7567  (talk) 19:28, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 64) * The episode did not give the slightest hint that the events took place in 22 BBY. Please put the correct source in.
 * 65) **Sourced.
 * 66) * "Ghost Company then settled up a base and shortly after Cody went with Wooley, Waxer, and Boil to scout ahead the city of Nabat. Then Cody and Wooley went to investigate the courtyard and discovered that the Twi'leks were being held prisoner." This is still improper English; "settled up" is not an existing idiom, and furthermore, the rest of the phrase is extremely choppy. Please reword this.
 * 67) **Fixed.
 * 68) ***They didn't "build" a base; that would mean constructing one and literally building it. They can establish a base. Furthermore, the first sentence is cut off too soon with nothing to satisfy your "shortly after". You need another independent clause in that sentence to fix it  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 69) ****Fixed.
 * 70) *****Lee, although I've changed this, please note that there was still something wrong with "shortly after" and the rest of the sentence after it. That phrase won't work without a proper subject in the sentence.  CC7567  (talk) 19:28, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 71) * "After reporting their findings to Kenobi and Windu, they moved out to the village. However, they were attacked by gutkurrs, released by tactical droid TX-20, the commander of the Confederate forces stationed in Nabat. Kenobi managed to lure them into an alley with the Force": this whole time, I have no idea who "they" refers to.
 * 72) **Fixed.
 * 73) * Context needed for the gutkurrs. What were they?
 * 74) **Adresssed.
 * 75) ***Nowhere in the episode did it say that they were native. Please provide your source.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 76) ****Fixed.
 * 77) * "Then, Cody and the Company created a diversion by attacking the droids, while Kenobi, Waxer, and Boil freed the prisoners and also managed to take out the rest of the proton cannons." There's a lack of flow and an unneeded sense of chronology here. Please reword.
 * 78) **Fixed.
 * 79) ***The "unneeded sense of chronology" and "choppiness" comes with the "Then" at the beginning of the sentence.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 80) ****Fixed.
 * 81) *****Lee, I've fixed this, but please take note: if you state "In order to achieve there goals," you need to state what they were, and you put in the wrong form of "their". Please proofread more in the future.  CC7567  (talk) 19:28, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 82) * "When the tactical droid commander was about to shot Kenobi": please reread this and try to change what you find. It's improper English and lacks good sentence flow.
 * 83) **Fixed.
 * 84) *The first two sentences of the P&T have no verifiability with their current wording and need more clarification. Furthermore, please proofread the last sentence and try to reword it.
 * 85) **Fixed.
 * 86) ***This still remains. How, specifically, was Wooley shown to be one of the best scouts when Cody picked them? If this is true, then anyone Cody picks for scouting is the best, and the reader has no clue why. Furthermore, the last sentence still lacks good flow.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 87) ****Fixed.
 * 88) *****Lee, this still does not work. What was Kenobi's exact quote and order to Cody for scouting ahead? Until you can clarify this in the article, that part of the P&T remains speculation. Furthermore, I've just gone ahead and fixed the last sentence for you.  CC7567  (talk) 19:28, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 89) ******Fixed. --Clone Commander Lee 10:41, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 90) *******Lee, putting the quote in the P&T does absolutely nothing. I'm asking you to clarify this in the text of the P&T, not provide a quote and still not relate it to the P&T. When I say "clarify it in the article", that means relate it back to your own words, not simply provide the lines from the episode and do nothing with it.  CC7567  (talk) 22:12, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 91) ********Sorry, CC. I don't really understand this objection. --Clone Commander Lee 07:25, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 92) *For future reference, you cannot "make someone able" to do something. You're better off with replacing it with "allowing" or "allowed".  CC7567  (talk) 06:52, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 93) **Should got them. Thanks for the review, CC. --Clone Commander Lee 18:11, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 94) ***Take two. --Clone Commander Lee 09:28, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Unidentified Senate Commando captain

 * Nominated by: --Clone Commander Lee 17:56, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A poor guy who must face Cad Bane. Also my first non-clone nom

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 17:49, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I'm sure others will find anything I may have missed. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:52, 28 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Due to the size of the article, you don't need two images.
 * 3) **I don't think so.
 * 4) ***Fixed.
 * 5) * "The captain and his commandos were unconvinced, however, and the captain ordered one of his subordinates to handcuff Bane. Aurra Sing, however, shot and killed the unfortunate man. Unfortunately, the captain had his neck snapped by Bane, killing him." Very choppy.
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) ***"Then Bane attacked the captain hit him against a speeder and grabbed his head. While his men were killed by the disembarking BX-series droid commandos and Weequay bounty hunter Shahan Alama Bane snapped the neck of the captain, killing him." Again, make sure you use proper punctuation. Your comma use is improving, but can improve more.
 * 8) ****Fixed.
 * 9) * Mention that he was a human male in the intro.
 * 10) **Fixed.
 * 11) * "When the speeder of the bounty hunters approached to the blocked sector the captain and his team were sent to arrest the harasser." Improper English
 * 12) **Fixed.
 * 13) ***Again, check your comma usage.
 * 14) ****Fixed.
 * 15) * "When the speeder of the bounty hunters approached to the blocked sector the captain and his team were sent to arrest the harasser. As the speeder landed the captain ordered Bane to take his hands up." Very choppy. Merge The last sentence with the preceding sentence. Also Lee, make sure you use words such as "soon" or "then", to get a sense of chronological order. You said the speeder approached in the first sentence, but it doesn't connect with the next when you say "As it landed". "Landed" isn't proper here as well.
 * 16) **Fixed.
 * 17) ***Still remains
 * 18) ****Fixed.
 * 19) * "The Duros took his hands up, but advised the captain to be not to hasty. The commando then ordered one of his men to arrest Bane. The man was however killed by a blaster bolt coming from a tower. The sharpshooter, Aurra Sing, quickly killed more of the captains men." Rather choppy.
 * 20) **Fixed.
 * 21) ***No, still remains.
 * 22) ****Fixed.
 * 23) * After the captain's death, is the rest of the information relevant to him?
 * 24) **I think so.
 * 25) ***"After all Commandos were dead Bane ordered the droids to take the uniforms of the dead soldiers. The bounty hunters were able to blackmail the release of Ziro by capturing some senators. The bounty hunters escaped with the Hutt, but not before setting up some explosive devices. Luckily Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker was able to save the senators." This is irrelevant to the captain, no need to explain what happen after his death. Also, with the shortening of the article, two images isn't needed. The images are closed to each other, and should be equally spread apart depending on the size of the article.
 * 26) ****Removed.
 * 27) *More to come.  JangFett  Talk 18:26, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) Fett II
 * 29) * "When the speeder of the bounty hunters approached to the east sector, the captain and his team were sent to arrest the driver, the speeder stopped and the captain ordered Bane to take his hands up." Again, make sure you use transition words such as "soon", "though", "however". You can split this sentence up to make it "When the speeder of the bounty hunters approached to the east sector, the captain and his team were sent to arrest the driver. Soon the speeder stopped and the captain ordered Bane to take his hands up."
 * 30) **Adressed.
 * 31) ***Forgot to mention, state were the speeder stopped. But I fixed it in the article :)
 * 32) * "The commando then ordered one of his men to arrest Bane, however the man was killed by a blaster bolt coming from a tower and the sharpshooter, Aurra Sing, quickly killed more of the captains men." She quickly killed more of the captains men with that shot? While you didn't mention that she or Bane killed his men before, it's redundant here.
 * 33) **Fixed.
 * 34) * "Then Bane attacked the captain hit him against a speeder and grabbed his head." Invalid flow of chronologically. You said Bane attack him then the captain, it is confusing without transition and proper punctuation.
 * 35) **Fixed.
 * 36) * "While his men were killed by the disembarking BX-series droid commandos and Weequay bounty hunter Shahan Alama, Bane snapped the neck of the captain, killing him." I wouldn't say "men" here since you mentioned another "man" that was killed before. Perhaps replace "man" with the rest of the captain's squad.
 * 37) **Fixed.
 * 38) * P&T-"The captain was a well trained Senate Commando." Fragment. Possibly expand, or merge with next sentence.
 * 39) **Fixed.
 * 40) * I suggest that you merge the choppy sentences of the P&T together Lee. Make sure they flow well together.
 * 41) **Fixed.
 * 42) * Expand the BtS, it is too choppy. Read through past smaller character GAs, such as Bel for examples.
 * 43) **Fixed.
 * 44) * JangFett  Talk 16:17, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) **Fixed. Thanks for the second review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 16:56, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 46) ***Anytime, good work.  JangFett  Talk 17:49, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) Soresu
 * 48) *Normally, I'd fix most of this myself, but there's some stuff I think you should know for the future.
 * 49) * First up: References always come immediately after punctuation, not before it, like you did at the beginning of the bio.
 * 50) **Adressed.
 * 51) ** No idea what you've done, but the infobox reffing is not screwed up, and the original objection remains&mdash;there is a reff before a comma. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:50, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 52) **Fixed.
 * 53) * led a group of Senate Commandos against Cad Bane during the Senate hostage crisis. Cad Bane and the crisis need context. Also, Senate hostage crisis is conjectural, so you shouldn't be using it verbatim. Maybe against a group of bounty hunters headed by Cad Bane when they attempted to raid the Republic Executive Building would be better.
 * 54) **Fixed.
 * 55) * Senate and Commandos should be consistently capitalised throughout the article.
 * 56) **Fixed.
 * 57) * shot and killed the unfortunate man Unfortunate is POV, please remove.
 * 58) **Removed.
 * 59) * The commandos aren't the underorganisation, it is an underorganisation.
 * 60) **Fixed.
 * 61) * approached to the east sector. Did they approach from the east or head toward the east? Either way, it isn't right. It needs to be either approached the east sector or approached from the east sector.
 * 62) **Fixed.
 * 63) * The Duros took his hands up, but advised the captain to be not to hasty. What Duros? It's confusing, since you haven'y mentioned him before. Maybe if you listed the involved bouty hunters when you first mention the posse. And it's put his hands up, not took.
 * 64) **Fixed.
 * 65) * The commando then ordered one of his men to arrest Bane, however the man was killed by a blaster bolt coming from a tower and the sharpshooter, Aurra Sing, quickly killed the rest of the captain's squad with more shots. Doesn't flow well.
 * 66) **Fixed.
 * 67) * While his men were killed by the disembarking BX-series droid commandos and Weequay bounty hunter Shahan Alama, Hang on. Haven't they all already been killed by Sing?
 * 68) **Fixed.
 * 69) * Although is repetitive in the P&T.
 * 70) **Fixed.
 * 71) * The second sources section is meant to be called "Notes and references"
 * 72) **Fixed.
 * 73) *That's it (for now). Before you nominate in future, make sure you give a good copy-edit to the article. I had to make quite a big copy-edit. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:43, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 74) **Should have catched them all, thanks for the (first) review Soresu. --Clone Commander Lee 10:39, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 75) ***That's okay, although I should note it's meant to be "caught them all". Catched is not a word. There'll be some more objections tomorrow. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:50, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 76) ****Last objection also fixed. --Clone Commander Lee 11:33, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 77) Makashi
 * 78) * Aurra Sing, however, shot and killed the man, the captain was attacked by Bane who snapped his neck, killing him. Doesn't flow well. Reword.
 * 79) **Reworded.
 * 80) * The 2nd, 3rd, and 4th sentences in the bio all start with "when". Please vary it a bit.
 * 81) **Adressed.
 * 82) * Ordered is a little repetitive in the bio.
 * 83) **Fixed.
 * 84) *That should be all of it, I think. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 13:37, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 85) **Got them all. Thanks for the second review SoresuMakashi. --Clone Commander Lee 17:52, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 86) Terms such as "unidentified" are out-of-universe and do not belong in the text of in-universe articles. They might be alright in the title because the conjecture tag nullifies the assertion that the title is an IU term, but they are in no way appropriate in the article itself. Graestan ( Talk ) 16:25, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 87) *Fixed. Thanks. --Clone Commander Lee 17:32, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 88) Attack of the Clone
 * 89) * Source required for "c. 22 BBY".
 * 90) **Sourced.
 * 91) * I have no idea who "they" refers to in the first sentence of the intro.
 * 92) **Fixed.
 * 93) * Source for him being a captain?
 * 94) **Sourced.
 * 95) * Fact tag in the body. Next time, please make sure that all the information you provide is entirely attributable to the sources you cite.
 * 96) **Sourced.
 * 97) * Why would Bane go to the Executive Building if he's trying to free Ziro from the Detention Center?
 * 98) **Fixed.
 * 99) ***"in order to capture the senators to blackmail the release of Ziro": you can't "blackmail" a release, but Bane can force Palpatine to release Ziro by taking hostages.  CC7567  (talk) 19:36, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 100) ****Fixed. --Clone Commander Lee 11:00, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 101) *Why did Bane order his droid commandos to take the Senate Commandos' armor?
 * 102) **Adressed.
 * 103) ***Lee, "disalert" is not a word. Please find a word that works better.  CC7567  (talk) 19:36, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 104) ****Reworded. --Clone Commander Lee 11:00, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 105) *****"to inform the central command of the guards that there were only war protestors." The droids in armor did nothing of the sort. It was a droid that deceived central command, but in no way was the armor involved in that. Please find the facts.  CC7567  (talk) 22:33, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 106) ******Fixed. --Clone Commander Lee 07:30, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 107) * What did the bounty hunters do after they killed the Senate Commandos?
 * 108) **Added.
 * 109) * Context needed for Yoda and Yularen in the Bts.
 * 110) **Added.
 * 111) *Lee, please try to find some sort of spelling and grammar check program next time to use on your nominations. If you can't access Microsoft Word, the web browser Firefox at least has a built-in spellcheck.  CC7567  (talk) 20:32, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 112) **I'll try. Thanks for the review CC. --Clone Commander Lee 09:38, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 113) *Neither "Hostage Crisis" or its guide is a source for Kane's portrayal of Yoda and Yularen. Please find a proper one.  CC7567  (talk) 19:36, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 114) **Sourced. --Clone Commander Lee 11:00, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Stripe

 * Nominated by:  Mauser  Comlink 09:06, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Another clone for you. 990 words.

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) No problem. Kilson Likes PIE 12:26, 24 July 09 (UTC)
 * 2) Remember that only italics are used in comic quotes, never bold. Otherwise look good after a copyedit. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 04:06, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 22:58, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) It's the least I could do after you gave me that Wookiee cookiee
 * 2) * "...Rodent tried to escape, though Rex chased him and destroyed him with a blaster shot." Too many pronouns, change the second him to Rodent or the droid.
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) * "Determined to stop the spy, Stripe had thrown a V-1 thermal detonator at the grate, which evaporated both the droid and a solid portion of the station's interior." Two things wrong here. First, the correct tense would be, "Stripe threw a..." Second, I think you should replace evaporated with destroyed. I believe evaporated only goes along with liquids, not solids, and if not, destroyed still probably sounds better.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * "Stripe proudly responded that the clones never left anything half-done." You repeated the same thing word-for-word in both the biography and the Pts. Just changeup some of the words in one of the sentances.
 * 7) **Tweaked the one in bio.
 * 8) * "The character of Stripe made his only appearances in Mouse Hunt, a short 5-page webcomic, preceding The Clone Wars Season One episode "Rookies" and published on StarWars.com." It's kind of unclear in this sentance whether Rookiees or Mouse Hunt was published on Star Wars.com. You should put published on Star Wars.com right before the preceding Rookies part.
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) *Other than that, nice job dude. Kilson Likes PIE 12:00, 24 July 09 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thanks for the review.  Mauser  Comlink 12:23, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) IFYLOFD:
 * 13) *<S>Are CC-7567 and CC-2224's nicknames really necessary?
 * 14) **Yes. Both are mentioned more than twice, especially Rex.
 * 15) * Give context on alert code Aurek: What does it mean?
 * 16) **Actually, the source doesn't specify it all, it's only mentioned once. I could assume that it could possibly mean the highest alert, but I won't.
 * 17) *Other than that, looks clean. Very good job.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:11, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thanks for the review.  Mauser  Comlink 23:19, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Before I get to anything else, "received his nickname because of the white-colored stripe" is pure speculation and does not belong on Wookieepedia. Graestan ( Talk ) 18:12, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) *Can't say I didn't anticipate that. I believe it is not speculation for the following reason. Per WP:ATT "Editors may make straightforward logical deductions based on fully attributed data that neither change the significance of the data nor require additional assumptions beyond what is in the source. It should be possible for any reader without specialist knowledge to understand the deductions." When we see clone trooper CT-27-5555, it is obvious that he's nicknamed Fives because of numbers in his designations, although the source doesn't say that explicitly. When we see a clone with a white stripe (which is visually underlined several times in the comic) it is similarly obvious where he got his nickname from, without requiring any speculation.  Mauser  Comlink 20:52, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **With all due respect, Mauser, the origin of Fives' nickname was more directly confirmed than Stripe's. After CT-27-5555 stated his designation to Rex and Cody, Hevy said "We call him Fives," which was more of a hint at Fives' nickname than Stripe's. What if Stripe took it in honor of a fallen comrade and then dyed his hair? What if it was from a tattooed stripe on his arm? Yes, your conclusion is the most probable, but it's still not 100% confirmed. Per the "nor require additional assumptions beyond what is in the source," speculation is still required to deduce the source of the nickname. I'd feel better if it's the reader making the connection on his or her own rather than outright saying it. In any case, it's still not known whether Stripe "received the nickname" or took it himself.  CC7567  (talk) 21:41, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Okay, I'm convinced. Adressed.  Mauser  Comlink 08:04, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) Attack of the Clone
 * 24) * "when the droid turned to be a shell for the droid's wheels": are you entirely sure of this? Yes, the wheels separated from the body, but I'd like to hear your reasoning.
 * 25) **The fact that the wheels tried to escape means they could act separately from Rodent's body. And it's not like in SW any separated droid part becomes an individual droid by default, it must have been specifically pre-constructed for this.
 * 26) * Please condense your information from "Rookies" or somehow rewrite it more in relation to Stripe. Stating all that stuff about "other clones" and then having to clarify later that Stripe is one of them is confusing.
 * 27) **Adressed.
 * 28) * Furthermore, why were they nicknamed "shinies"?
 * 29) **Removed "shinies" altogether by replacing it with a self-explaining "rookies" term.
 * 30) * Can you please clarify why all that Bts information is important enough to be mentioned in Stripe's article, particularly the part about Carlisle?
 * 31) **Funny, I have no problem with removing the "Carlisle" part, but I thought that explaining where "Pastil" comes from is important and you removed it altogether.
 * 32) ***I must have removed it inadvertently; I've replaced it.  CC7567  (talk) 22:58, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) *Please be careful about the amount of detail you include next time. There was a lot of information that wasn't directly relevant to Stripe.  CC7567  (talk) 20:56, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **Thanks for your review and copy-edit.  Mauser  Comlink 21:27, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Battle of Phaseera

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 06:09, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Floyd strikes again.

(4 ACs/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:20, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:38, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 22:06, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Good work Floyd :)  JangFett  Talk 23:48, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:33, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --Clone Commander Lee 17:53, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 06:24, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * so if the Sith tried to move troops through the valley the outpost would spot them and signal ahead to the base camp, so their defenses would be up and fully operational before the Sith ever reached them. So is repetitive.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) *However, when the Sith commanders ordered the Gloom Walkers to take the outpost during the daytime, the Gloom Walkers objected It seems like the netire squad objected. Maybe if you cahnged it to "a number of Gloom Walkers" or something like that?
 * 5) **No, they all were. Path of Destruction describes that they were all shocked.
 * 6) ***Including Ulabore? Did he object? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:42, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ****No, he didn't. But that is expounded upon in the next sentence. It is stated that Ulabore didn't reconsider, so obviously he didn't object.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:10, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * With the outpost taken out, the Republic camp had no idea that the main Sith force were marching through the valley toward them and were taken by surprise, and the Sith took the planet. Doesn't flow well. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:55, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:10, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) "Due to a seemingly impossible display of shooting by Dessel..." This is confusing. It isn't clear why his shooting was impossible, or even whether or not it was good shooting.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:07, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) *Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:10, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) From the Council Chambers:
 * 13) * "The battle" section focuses solely on the Gloom Walkers' mission, and then glosses over the rest of the battle with "The Republic forces were taken by surprise, and the Sith took the planet." Is it possible to expand on this or is the information simply not available?
 * 14) **There's really no other information. The book focuses solely on the Gloom Walkers' mission.
 * 15) *And that's it. Great job. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 02:04, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 05:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Added GAnom tag. --Clone Commander Lee 06:33, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

Battle of unidentified planet (tactical droid)
> QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:18, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nominated by: <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Nomination comments: What can I say? I'm really getting into this...

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:00, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:30, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Looking good.--Kreivi Wolter 14:59, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Why not? Looks good. -Gmalek 19:27, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 19:55, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 02:18, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:15, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Object > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:19, 27 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 16:44, 26 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:19, 27 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:19, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * The intro needs to contain more about the actual battle. ATM, its sounding like the tactical droid was alone, since you make no mention of the other droids.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Could the image caption be changed? It should describe what's happening in the picture. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:47, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) * The BTS could be expanded (mention which episode this led into, etc.)
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Please make an Aftermath section. (This led into an epsiode, so I still believe you could have farily significant information there).
 * 5) **The problem is that events in the episode do not have any relation to this battle. Despite what our Battle of Quell artice claims, there is no evidence in the episode that Aayla's ship was attacked while she returned from this battle. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) ***Fair enough. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:46, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) * Also, there is info that is currently only present in the intro: "...during the Clone Wars between the Galactic Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems." You should either remove the "between the Republic and Confedercy" part, or move it down to the bio as well. (Right now, the bio doesn't state that the War was between the Republic and Confederacy).
 * 3) **I decided to remove it from the intro.
 * 4) *Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:14, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for review. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Attack of the Clone
 * 2) * I understand your reasoning that we don't know what happened between this battle and Quell, but if the infobox claims that the Battle of Quell is next, then there needs to be a better flow of events. If not, and especially per the TCW web comic&mdash;the majority of the other comics say that they take place "just before" the corresponding episodes, while this one is notably one of the few that does not and states "The events in this story occur some time before  ' Jedi Crash'"&mdash;then perhaps we can't assume the chronology as you're saying.
 * 3) **Point taken and the Battle of Quell is removed from the infobox. Using the same logic, I figured out that we can't say that Mission to Florrum occurred prior to this one, so I've removed Florrum as well.
 * 4) * Please be careful what you assume for the Prelude. All we know is that a trap was set, and I don't see anything to indicate that the tactical droid and its forces were on the planet before Secura lured it to the planet's data banks. The current wording&mdash;"a Confederate tactical droid that commanded the Separatist forces on an unidentified planet"&mdash;suggests otherwise.  CC7567  (talk) 18:45, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Before I'll even look at this: don't use OOU terms like "unidentified" in the IU articles, please. Graestan ( Talk ) 16:20, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Fixed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:08, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Attack of the Clone II
 * 4) * Per Rule 8, please take care of that intro redlink that I added.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Are you sure that Galle and Barr were lieutenants at the time? I'm quite certain Reversal of Fortune took place after Headgames, which is where they supposedly first appeared as lieutenants.  CC7567  (talk) 22:40, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Fair enough. Fixed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:35, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:18, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Because they would have only a couple of lines, I decided not to use the "prelude" and "aftermath" sections and instead merged everything into "the battle". <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * I'll take another look when I can get to it.  CC7567  (talk) 05:34, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Should the Jedi Order be mentoned in infobox?--Kreivi Wolter 23:56, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Not necessarily. Although Aayla is a Jedi, she acted on behalf of the Republic, and listing the Jedi Order seems redundant. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:35, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Barb Mentir

 * Nominated by: --Clone Commander Lee 18:51, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Minor pirate from TCW The Gungan General

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Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 16:59, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) After a final set of fixes. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:59, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Add at least one more image.
 * 3) **Added by JMAS.
 * 4) * Missing quotes for the head and bio.
 * 5) ** I'll ask JMAS.
 * 6) ***Added by JMAS.
 * 7) * Check your sources. Did you also check the guide?
 * 8) **Checked.
 * 9) ***Lee, that is not the way to source. You just copied and pasted "Shadow of Malevolence" guide, but renamed the title name to "The Gungan General". I suggest that you double check your sources and then add the two guides (Gungan & Dooku) into the "Soruces" section. Also, don't source to the decoded episode on StarWars.com, because they replace them each week. Source Gungan decoded content with:.
 * 10) ****Sourced.
 * 11) *****I redid some referencing and sourcing.
 * 12) * "Around 27 BBY, Barb Mentir was involved in a knife fight, there he lost his right eye in the fight and later wore an eye patch over where it had been." I probably forgot, but did it say around 27 BBY or said couple years before?
 * 13) ** It don't know certainly the info was there before i worked on the article and I can't watch the decoded episode.
 * 14) ***I suggest that you remove it the "27 BBY" with "Before the Clone Wars".
 * 15) ****Fixed.
 * 16) * "Around 22 BBY, the Sith Lord and Separaratist leader Count Dooku crashlanded on Vanqor, after being chased and shot down by Jedi Knights Obi-Wan Kenobi and Anakin Skywalker." So Anakin and Obi-Wan chased and shot down Dooku? You fail to mention their ships. Also too much context on Dooku. You can say Confederate Head of State Count Dooku, or just Sith Lord.
 * 17) **Adressed.
 * 18) * "After trapping the Jedi in a cave, Dooku met some members of Ohnaka's gang. Hondo Ohnaka took the Count to Florrum and captured him there." Dooku was not captured on Florrum. He was taken captive before hand and wasn't released by the pirates.
 * 19) **Fixed.
 * 20) * "Ohnaka contacted Supreme Chancellor Palpatine of the Galactic Republic and agreed to acceppt a ransom in form of spice for the Count." How this is relevant to Barb?
 * 21) **Says why the Republic went to Florrum.
 * 22) * If you're not aware of Barb being on Vanqor, then don't add excessive details about the capture of Dooku, Obi-Wan and Anakin. While you're just summarizing the plot to "Dooku captured", none of the details are related to Barb.
 * 23) **Background info.
 * 24) * "Falso, however, wanted to betray Ohnaka and conspired with Mentir." This sentence doesn't flow well with the next sentence. You say he conspired with Mentir, but then the next sentence, Falso talked with Ohnaka.
 * 25) **Fixed.
 * 26) * "Falso also expressed his sorrows that Ohnka would negotiate with the Galactic Republic diplomats and ordered Mentir to shoot the Republic shuttle down." Expressed his sorrows with whom?
 * 27) **Fixed.
 * 28) * "After landing, Falso was awaited by Falso who asked him if he had completed his task." Falso was awaited by Falso?
 * 29) ** Oops. Corrected.
 * 30) * "Mentir hesitantly told him that the shuttle had crashed in the Doshar fields." told who?
 * 31) **Fixed.
 * 32) * "Falso then asked him if hed had the spice." Fragment, consider merging.
 * 33) **Merged.
 * 34) * "Mentir first appered as an unidentified pirate in The Gungan General the 12th episode of the Clone Wars TV series, aired at January 9, 2009." While it was the 12th episode, don't mention it because of the unestablished timelime. Airdate is fine.
 * 35) **Fixed.
 * 36) * Again, a lot of details aren't related to Barb. The article seems if it is a short summary of "Dooku Captured" and "Gungan General". While you do have most information about Barb, please go back and remove any irrelevant details that don't concern him. Sentences like this: "Dooku then choked Falso to death and escaped in their ship.", shouldn't belong in a article about Barb.
 * 37) **Fixed.
 * 38) *Lee, like your other noms, please make sure you give your articles a good copyedit. I see a lot of grammatical errors, spelling errors, and tense issues. While I corrected most of them, please go back and check for yourself.
 * 39) **I'll can't do a copyedit myself.
 * 40) ***At least try, and once you're done checking, you can ask someone else to give it a copyedit :)
 * 41) ****I read through the article.
 * 42) * JangFett  Talk 19:29, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) **I don't get all really well but thanks for the review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 14:31, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) Few more for now
 * 45) * The "Death as a pirate" section is too small to have its own section. You can merge it with the other.
 * 46) **Merged.
 * 47) * Intro-"However some clone troopers, along with Gungan Representative Jar Jar Binks, had survived the impact and managed to kill all pirates, except Falso, who returned to the base and told Ohnaka that the Republic had sent an army instead of the ransom." Whle you mentioned the clone troopers and Jar Jar in the intro, you failed to mention it in his bio.
 * 48) **Fixed.
 * 49) * P&T-"Also, he was able to fly a Flarestar ship so good to force a Nu-class shuttle, piloted by clone trooper pilots down." A bit too POV
 * 50) **Reworded.
 * 51) ***"Good enough" is still more towards POV.
 * 52) ****reworded.
 * 53) * JangFett  Talk 17:21, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 54) **Fixed. Thanks for both review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 17:28, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 55) ***No problem Lee, more to come.
 * 56) Fett will look once more
 * 57) * Intro-"Around 22 BBY, he cooperated with Turk Falso to betray the leader of their gang, who had captured Count Dooku, leader of the Confederacy of Independent Systems." Context on Falso.
 * 58) **Fixed.
 * 59) * "After discussing the ransom with Ohnaka, Falso met with Mentir and told him that the spice was on the way and ordered Mentir to shoot the Republic shuttle down, being careful to not damage the spice." This sentence needs clarifying. It is quite confusing when Falso ordered Mentir to do something. The way the sentence is worded sounds like Falso is telling Mentir to shoot the ship, however, shoot the ship with what? Where is the spice?
 * 60) **Fixed.
 * 61) * "Mentir felt the plan was too risky and asked him about Ohnaka. Falso calmed his fears and claimed they would be long gone before Ohnaka realized what happened. Mentir then took a Flarestar-class Weequay ship and waited in Florrum's atmosphere for the arrival of the Republic shuttle." These sentences are too choppy.
 * 62) **Fixed.
 * 63) * "He opened fire, and after firing two missiles, successfully managed to bring the shuttle down." He opened fire with what? Also after "He opened fire," the next part of the sentence doesn't make sense. "Successfully managed" doesn't work here.
 * 64) **Fixed.
 * 65) * "He returned to the pirate base where he reported in to Falso." Merge this with the next sentence.
 * 66) **Fixed.
 * 67) * "Falso then found Mentir, planning to escape with a ship." This sentence is very confusing. Reword.
 * 68) **Fixed.
 * 69) * BtS- I see a repetition of "He".
 * 70) **Fixed.
 * 71) * JangFett  Talk 00:38, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 72) **Got them all. Thanks for the third review Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 10:44, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 73) Fett IV
 * 74) * "After discussing the ransom with Ohnaka, Turk Falso, a fellow pirate in the gang, met with Mentir..." Curious how you say Falso is Ohnaka's second in command in the intro, and then change the context for Falso to "a fellow pirate in the gang". Also, it looks like they're separate. Ohnaka, Turk Falso, a fellow pirate in the gang.. Almost appears if they're three people.
 * 75) **Fixed.
 * 76) ***Prefacing this by stating that I haven't seen any decoded episodes. Is it stated in the decoded episode that Turk Falso is Hondo's second-in-command? If not, then the statement has no basis. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 16:19, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 77) ****I don't have seen the decoded episode too. So I corrected it. --Clone Commander Lee 16:26, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 78) *****"After discussing the ransom with Ohnaka, Turk Falso, another pirate in the gang, met with Mentir and told him that the spice was on the way and ordered Mentir to shoot down the" The way it's worded sounds like Mentir is discussing the ransom with three people.
 * 79) ******Changed. --Clone Commander Lee 16:57, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 80) *Good work Lee, make sure you double check for grammatical errors, underlinking, and tense issues. You can always ask someone to give it a copyedit.  JangFett  Talk 16:08, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 81) **Fixed. Thanks for the reviews Jang. --Clone Commander Lee 16:11, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 82) QGJ
 * 83) ** The "Life as a pirate" subsection is unnecessary, since it basically covers the whole biography. The biography is rather short, so you don't actually need to use subsections at all.
 * 84) ***Removed.
 * 85) ** "After discussing the ransom with Ohnaka, Turk Falso, who was another pirate in the gang, met with Mentir and told him that the spice was on the way and ordered Mentir to shoot down the Republic shuttle, which was transporting the spice, with his ship, being careful to not damage the spice." This sentence is a run-on and reads awkwardly. Split it.
 * 86) ***Splitted.
 * 87) ** The last paragraph in the bio is rather choppy. Merge some of the sentences together.
 * 88) **Adressed.
 * 89) ** "Mentir then took a Flarestar-class Weequay ship..." Next sentence: He returned to the pirate base where he reported in to Falso and Mentir. Something's wrong here, because it currently implies as if Mentir reported to himself :P
 * 90) ***Fixed.
 * 91) ** Why is the episode guide for "Dooku Captured" listed in the sources? Does it mention Mentir? If not, it should be removed.
 * 92) ***Removed.
 * 93) **Quite good, overall. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:45, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 94) ***Got them. Thanks for the reviwe, Qui-Gon. --Clone Commander Lee 09:20, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Lizard Warrior

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 13:35, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: OK, fine. Let's go for a hat-trick. L is for Lizard Warrior. ~ SavageBob 13:35, 30 July 2009 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:56, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 23:59, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 23:31, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) One thing: The last two paragraphs of History have a lot of choppy sentences. Merge some together. Other than that, good work.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:21, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I've tried to massage it a bit more; is that better? ~ SavageBob 02:56, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Council Chambers:
 * 4) * "Graak, on the other hand, was left to his fate.": What fate? It's a bit unclear as it stands.
 * 5) *Otherwise looks good. 1210 words, so you might want to consider going for FA once this passes. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 18:08, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Thanks for the review! I've made it more explicit; is that better? And, yeah, this may end up on the FAN page one of these days! ~ SavageBob 06:29, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Eminence (Carrack-class)

 * Nominated by: Kilson Likes PIE 17:16, 30 July 09 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Probably should have nominated this a long time ago, goes along with the Braha'tok and Tortarak.

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Support Object
 * 1) Objection addressed via IRC  JangFett  Talk 20:32, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) IFYLOFD:
 * 2) *Infobox not fully sourced.
 * 3) *"During the battle, the Eminence engaged the Braha'tok-class gunship the Braha'tok, a ship less than one third of the cruiser's size. " Doesn't flow well, too many "the"s.
 * 4) *Lots of overlinking.
 * 5) *Mention its involvement in the Galactic Civil War in History.
 * 6) * IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:32, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **OK, your objections are addressed. Kilson Likes PIE 01:42, 02 August 09 (UTC)
 * 8) "Emperor Palpatine, who was currently on the Death Star, was planning on the Rebel Alliance's fleet attacking the Death Star while they had the chance to destroy the superweapon before it was done, and devised a plan to stop them" Quite confusing, this doesn't make sense if you read it. It should be "Emperor Palpatine, who was currently on the Death Star, predicted the Rebel Alliance's fleet would attack.." or something like that.  JangFett  Talk 04:47, 3 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)
 * 1) Nominator has recently been blocked from editing for a significantly extended period of time. The article can be re-nominated if and when the nominator returns. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:23, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 01:11, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *In light of Kilson's permanent block, I have decided to take over this nom and will do my best to handle any objections. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:46, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Dyer

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  Talk 02:03, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Freeze!"

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Support
 * 1)  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:40, 2 August 2009 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) IFYLOFD:
 * 2) *In the intro, you say that Dyer "ordered his men to enter the base" while in the Bio it says he was already there.
 * 3) **Addressed
 * 4) *Mention the Endor Strike Team's intentions in storming the bunker.
 * 5) **Addressed
 * 6) *"Dyer was described as a natural leader, who showed good leadership skills" Aren't these two facts basically the same thing?
 * 7) **Yeah, basically. Fixed.
 * 8) *A lot of the P&T seems to just retell parts of the bio.
 * 9) **I managed to cut down some of the recurring parts.
 * 10) *"Sound Designer Ben Burtt, who sound designed for both the Prequel and Original trilogies of Star Wars, " "Sound designer" and "sound designed" is repetitive.
 * 11) * IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:43, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **Addressed, thanks for the review Floyd :)
 * 13) QGJ
 * 14) * For the Fact Files, you have to list exact pages that mention Dyer. Ask Borsk for help, he is the Fact File guru :P
 * 15) **Addressed and he fixed them :)
 * 16) *" a group of Rebels infiltrated the bunker and surprised the stationed Imperial troops inside the bunker" Bunker is repetitive.
 * 17) **Addressed
 * 18) * Both in the intro and the bio you state that the bunker "was made impenetrable", yet you later say that the Rebels did penetrate it. I think you should better say that the bunker was impenetrable from Dyer/Jerjerrod's point of view or something like that.
 * 19) **Addressed and removed. I didn't think it was necessary.
 * 20) *" a group of members of the Alliance to Restore the Republic, entered the bunker to try and destroy the shield generator, Dyer ordered his men to enter the bunker". Enter the bunker is also repetitive.
 * 21) **Fixed
 * 22) * "Dyer ordered his men to enter the bunker and confront the intruders." Next sentence: "After jumping out from behind a wall, Dyer confronted Rebel General Han Solo". Again, confront is repetitive.
 * 23) **Fixed :)
 * 24) * The last two sentences in the P&T still seem to just retell his bio. Try to reword it so that it showed more of Dyer's personality.
 * 25) **Fixed
 * 26) *That's all, I guess. Nice work. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:18, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) **Thanks for the Review QGJ :)
 * 28) Mauser:
 * 29) *"aided by Lieutenant Grond, Lieutenant Renz, and stormtrooper Sergeant Wallen" - only Grond was Dyer's aide. Wallen was assigned to his command and Renz simply took command after Dyer's death. No proof they were his aides.
 * 30) *Could you get a better infobox image, where his mouth is not open?
 * 31) *Why did Endor Strike Team try to destroy the generator in the first place?
 * 32) *In the intro you say the Rebel surprised troops stationed in the bunker, it must be in the bio as well.
 * 33) *You don't even say he ordered Solo to freeze?
 * 34) *Perharps you could get another images of Dyer, not just Burrt himself?
 * 35) *Your BTS is as big as the rest of the body. Maybe you could try to expand the bio somehow?  Mauser  Comlink 21:46, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) From the Council Chambers:
 * 37) *"When the Endor Strike Team, a group of members of the Alliance to Restore the Republic,": Unless you have a source to the contrary, "Endor Strike Team" is not a canonical formal name for the team. The manner in which it is currently used implies otherwise. Please reword.
 * 38) *I don't see anything else that Mauser hasn't already pointed out. Good job. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 18:38, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Not an objection, but it would be cool if you found out who portrayed Dyer in the radio dramatization. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:18, 31 July 2009 (UTC)

Lucia

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 04:00, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of FloydProject: Path of Destruction.

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Support
 * 1) Good work Floyd.  JangFett  Talk 03:42, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:48, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Mauser  Comlink 21:53, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 18:48, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) --Eyrezer 07:48, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Lucia served in the Gloom Walkers under the command of Lieutenant Ulabore, and by the Battle of Phaseera in 1,002 BBY had seen relatively little combat but was still recognized as one of the best shots in the unit and served as a sniper in battle. Break it up. Also, there are two "served"s.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * served as a junior officer. In 1,002 BBY, Lucia and the Gloom Walkers served in the Battle of Phaseera, an effort to capture the Republic manufacturing world of Phaseera. At that time, Lucia had seen little action, but was already regarded as one of the best shots in the unit and served as a sniper in combat. Three serves.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * The Gloom Walkers were tasked with taking out a Republic outpost which was overlooking a valley that led to the Republic base camp in Phaseera's capital city, preventing the Brotherhood army from moving through the valley during the daytime without being spotted and their presence alerted to the Republic soldiers in the camp. Break it up. Otherwise, nice article. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:03, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 05:07, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Battle of Rishi

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 21:14, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The TCW comic battle wave continues...

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Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 17:23, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:51, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) You do a nice writing job, QuiGon, and now that you're starting to become more of an article-writing veteran, I want to see you pay closer attention to spelling typos and linking/HTML accuracy. My copy-edit will give you a better understanding for what I refer to. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:02, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 10:06, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Haven't read the comic itself, but the article looks good. Keep it up. Kreivi Wolter 13:28, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett gets back into TCW territory
 * 2) * In the intro and body, context on Green Company.
 * 3) **Is this really necessary? I think it's pretty obvious that Green Company is a military unit, and I can't really think of another context for it. CC doesn't contextualize Green Company, for example :P
 * 4) ***haha, all right. Thanks for pointing that out :P
 * 5) * "After Cooker had informed Fisto that he would have no line of sight with the enemy from that position, the Jedi Master finally revealed his plan to the clone; Cooker was supposed to aim for Fisto's shoulder and fire continuously." Correct me if I'm wrong, but the way this sentence is set up sounds like Cooker wants to shoot Fisto's shoulder. Clarification is needed, was this Fisto's plan?
 * 6) **Hopefully clarified.
 * 7) * "At that moment, Fisto was contacted by Cooker, who asked the Jedi to stay down and shot at the cannon, destroying it." Quite confusing. Cooker asked the Jedi to stay down and shot at the cannon, destroying it?
 * 8) **Split into two sentences to make less confusing.
 * 9) * "The Republic forces, along with some of the Rishii warriors then arrived and attacked the mines, forcing the remaining Geonosians to flee." Quite confusing. Should be, "The Republic forces, along with the help of Rishii warriors, that arrived, attacked the mines.." or something like that.
 * 10) **With the help of almighty em dashes, this should be fixed :P
 * 11) ***Much better :)
 * 12) *Overall, good work Qui-Gon.  JangFett  Talk 17:16, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 17:19, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) Soresu
 * 15) * Context on Green Company in the body. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:22, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) **Again, I don't think it is necessary. See above. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 11:31, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) ***It's okay, I guess. Hwever, note how CC uses "the troopers" or "the clone troopers of Green Company", which is, in fact, context in a subtle way. You link it in the next sentence, which is fine I suppose, just a little less clear. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:51, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Again, there's not enough information for an "Aftermath" section. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 21:14, 1 August 2009 (UTC)

Finn Galfridian

 * Nominated by:  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 03:48, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of my Galfridian Project

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Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 00:43, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Good job. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:52, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Intro needs expanding.
 * 3) * "Although the two and their people were able to reach the hangar, the Yuuzhan Vong kept the building under siege." Try to reword "the two and their people". Mention who where the "two".
 * 4) * The "Yavin 4" section is too small to have its own section. Merge the sentence with the bio content.
 * 5) * P&T-"He had a dislike of shopping unless it was for food." Merge these short, choppy sentences.
 * 6) * P&T-"He was forced to take on much responsibility after his father elected to remain on Artorias to fight the Yuuzhan Vong invaders." That is not needed, it is already mentioned in the bio.
 * 7) * P&T-"He confided to Luke Skywalker that he didn't know how to lead, but was informed by the Jedi Master that if he faked confidence, he would get his people's backing." Again, not needed. You're just restating information from the bio. Unless you can state and source that he wasn't a natural leader and wasn't sure of himself in leading.
 * 8) * P&T-"He wanted to join his father's strike force against the Yuuzhan Vong despite the near certainty of death and at one point told Skywalker that he needed to find his mother and sister, despite knowing they were being held in captivity by the invaders." Again, not needed. Rewording content from the bio and then place it in the P&T is not concise.
 * 9) * Overall, try to lessen the play by play detail from the bio. Other than that, good work.
 * 10) **I think I got them all PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 21:53, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) Soresu
 * 12) * First off, when you type bolded comic quotes, you are meant to use italics instead.
 * 13) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * Context on Artorias. Just "the planet Artorias" should be enough.
 * 15) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * Mention that his Force-sensitivity was discovered in the intro. ATM, he isn't explicitly linked to having the ability.
 * 17) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * Context on the Yuuzhan Vong in the intro and body.
 * 19) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***You don't need to use up a whole sentence. Just add a tag at the end, like "Yuuzhan Vong, a species of extragalactic invaders, attempted to conquer the planet". SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:44, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ****Addressed
 * 22) * Check for underlinking.
 * 23) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Got the last few, I think. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:40, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) * his leadership qualities when he was thrust into a leadership role for the citizens of Artorias, confiding to Luke Skywalker that he was in over his head and wasn't a leader. Leader is too repetitive.
 * 26) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) ***Still two left. Change one more one. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:40, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) ****I must've missed it the first time around. Now it's addressed.
 * 29) * was ultimately lost. Due to the timely assistance of Luke Skywalker he was able to evacuate safely from Artorias. However his sister and mother were ultimately captured, Ultimately is reptitive.
 * 30) ** Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) *Not bad, overall. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:45, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) ** Thanks :)  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 22:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I feel that I musk ask: are you 100% sure you wanna do this? Because you will most likely have to update it every month for several years. Oh, and the second issue is already out.  Mauser  Comlink 21:55, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Yes, I want to get it to GA status at least. I figure I'll wait awhile before I FAN any of the Galfridians.  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 23:31, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Caled Galfridian

 * Nominated by:  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 03:48, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of my Galfridian Project

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Object Comments
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Intro needs a major expansion
 * 3) *I see a lot of play by play detail that is not needed. Try to go back and remove any irrelevant information, or just minor details.
 * 4) *Like Finn, I see a lot of underlinking problems. Any new subject that appears in the intro and main body, in this case his bio, must be linked. i.e, Hoth or Rebel Alliance. During my copyedit, I linked a couple of subjects.
 * 5) * "They were herded into a Yuuzhan Vong slaveship and imprisoned." Merge this with the previous sentence and identify "they".
 * 6) * "Caled ruled an idyllic planet that was so peaceful that it did not even possess a rudimentary defense force." "they" is repetitive. Also, try to reword this sentence. "that was so peace that it did not even possess a rudimentary defense force". Quite confusing, possibly it is the repetition of "they"
 * 7) * "The king and his rushed towards the marketplace to find Caled's wife Nina and daughter Kaye." "the king and his rushed"? Reword
 * 8) * P&T-"However, Caled also showed responsibility towards his people." Try to mention this eariler in the P&T.
 * 9) *P&T- "When the Yuuzhan Vong invaded Artorias, Caled's first action was to rush to the marketplace in order to save his wife and daughter. He personally ordered the Artorians in the marketplace to retreat to the hangar, and once inside, set about organizing a defense. When Luke Skywalker gave him the opportunity to evacuate the planet, Caled refused. He cited his duty as king to keep Artorias safe and wished to look for any signs of his wife and daughter. The king then organized a strike force to attack the Yuuzhan Vong directly." This paragraph just restates what happened in the bio. It is not needed in the P&T.
 * 10) * JangFett  Talk 16:42, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ** I think I got it all  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 23:47, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ***More to come.  JangFett  Talk 00:46, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) ****Try it now  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 04:14, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Addressed  PointGiven  ( But...it was so artistically done... ) 21:30, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Lasavvou

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 08:05, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: None

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Would've supported on FAN if it had stayed over 1000 words.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:56, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice work Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk  08:07, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:40, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) * Have you checked the CSWE? QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 07:50, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **He does not appear. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:23, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nayayen
 * 4) * "a branch of the crime syndicate the Exchange." This sounds a little odd, surely just "the Exchange crime sydicate"?
 * 5) ** It is not the Exchange but rather a different, side company that is covertly owned by the Exchange.
 * 6) ***Nevermind, I realized what you ment after posting that. Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:26, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * You also don't mention that the docking authority was owned by the Exchange in the body of the article.
 * 8) **I thought I'd remedied that already.
 * 9) * Link to CUSWE entry?
 * 10) **It says nothing but "He was stranded and got saved." It doesn't really help the article.
 * 11) * "...Kahranna, as well as her family, with him off the planet." Nar Shaddaa is a moon.
 * 12) **Fixed.
 * 13) * Same planet/moon issue near the end of the P&T and Bts.
 * 14) **Fixed.
 * 15) *Other than that, looks good Naru. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk  09:36, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * You'll need to take care of that redlink now that Rule 8 has been tweaked to have none in the intro. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk  17:36, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **It was a non-article that I'd forgotten was deleted or moved or what-have-you. The link has been removed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 05:23, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) QGJ
 * 19) ** I think you should use the GameLS template in the bio.
 * 20) ***Added.
 * 21) ** The mention of the Jedi Civil War is unique to the intro.
 * 22) ***Added.
 * 23) ** You use the "with what credits he had" construction twice. Try to vary it a bit.
 * 24) ***Fixed.
 * 25) ** Bts. "If the Exile follows the dark path when the Ithorian asks if she is part of the dock authority, if the player says that she is and that they can negotiate a lower price, he will pay her 200 credits to get more time to pay the fee but never talk to her again." Three "if"s in the same sentence doesn't quite work. Reword.
 * 26) ***How's this? NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 05:23, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) ****You haven't touched this sentence at all. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:43, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) *****Sorry. Fixed.
 * 29) **Good job otherwise. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 21:02, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Lady Blue

 * Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:59, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: She was a great gal.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 01:02, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Emon should have kept her for himself :). SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:00, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:58, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:59, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Looks good to me. Sad story, though.  Really hits ya where you live.  Trak Nar  Ramble on 07:53, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * My only objection is more of a verification of information. I'm rather curious where you're getting this 2 ABY date from, since everything in the game happens post-Hoth. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:10, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **The lead quote. The game's set in 3 ABY and she won Miss Liberty the previous year. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:45, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Ah, ok. Good enough for me. Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:58, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

The Clone Wars: Shakedown

 * Nominated by: Kilson Likes PIE 04:53, 04 August 09 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Keeping the OOU party going. There are now two other great users who have written OOUs, and I hope many more will come. I'm now considering making an OOU project.

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Watch the spelling mistakes though. I corrected around 5. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:09, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) *The referencing can be more specific, since we can now link to individual pages of the comic. Please update the references accordingly.
 * 3) **Just to clarify, the same goes here as on Cold Snap above. Make sure each item is referenced to the correct page number rather than just adding one page number to the existing ref. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 04:27, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *Otherwise, looks good after a short copyedit. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 02:54, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)
 * 1) Nominator has recently been blocked from editing for a significantly extended period of time. The article can be re-nominated if and when the nominator returns. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:23, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I'd like to take over this one. It follows an established format, so it should be an easy one to follow.  Mauser  Comlink 22:21, 8 August 2009 (UTC)

Llokay

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 08:19, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A double nom with Yevra, and part of FloydProject: Path of Destruction.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 15:45, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Mauser  Comlink 22:03, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:27, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) --Eyrezer 06:07, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:09, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) *<S>"Llokay, along with Sirak and Yevra waited in the library, while Githany lured Bane, who had left his lightsaber in his personal chambers, into the the archives." This sentence is confusing by the way it's set up. Too much is happening. Possibly split up the sentences to ease the clause.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) *Good work Floyd; a interesting read too :) I need to finish reading Path of Destruction  JangFett  Talk 23:44, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 05:03, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * A picture of Githany might add to the article, seeing as she killed him. --Eyrezer 06:07, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Yevra

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 08:19, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A double nom with Llokay, and part of FloydProject: Path of Destruction.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 15:45, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Mauser  Comlink 22:04, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:27, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) --Eyrezer 06:12, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:09, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * "Yevra, along with Sirak and Llokay waited in the library, while Githany lured Bane, who had left his lightsaber in his personal chambers, into the the archives." Same comment as above.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) *Another good read Floyd. However, I noticed that the article is similar to Llokay :D  JangFett  Talk 23:51, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **You noticed? :P Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 05:03, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * A pic of Githany perhaps? --Eyrezer 06:12, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

CT-43/002

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 15:05, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A rare non-TCW clone nom. Enjoy.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1)  JangFett  Talk 17:39, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Mauser  Comlink 22:08, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Intro-"CT-43, however, turned out to be the only casualty of the entire squad, which eventually completed its mission" Quite confusing. So when CT-43 died the mission was completed? The "its" needs clarifying.
 * 3) **Reworded the whole sentence.
 * 4) * "Clone trooper CT-43/002 was a clone of bounty hunter Jango Fett, born on the planet of Kamino to serve in the Grand Army of the Republic." I believe like all clone articles, the way this sentence is set up sounds like Jango Fett was also born on Kamino. With the removal of the "Born on Kamino" part, the sentence should flow better.
 * 5) **How does it look now?
 * 6) ***Better. :)
 * 7) * BtS needs sourcing
 * 8) **It's self-sourcing, so it does not.  CC7567  (talk) 23:47, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Thanks for correcting me CC.  JangFett  Talk 23:52, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) *Great work Qui-Gon. Always good to see non-TCW clone articles once in a while :P  JangFett  Talk 23:36, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thanks. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 15:08, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) Before I dive in, I'm wondering if we can keep the term "Muunilinst 10" from looking like an official designation, unless some source explicitly states that it was. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:43, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *Hmm, if you are talking about the capitalization of "the", then that's how the Insider article spells it. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 08:19, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * No quotes available
 * No information for a "P&T" section. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 15:05, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

The Clone Wars: The Dreams of General Grievous

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  Talk 16:12, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Continuing the OOU TCW comic wave.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Kreivi Wolter 03:47, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 13:34, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) * We can now link to individual pages of the webcomic, so please reference accordingly.
 * 3) *Otherwise, great job. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 03:33, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Addressed. Thanks for the review Jonathan :)
 * 5) ***See my explanation under Transfer above. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 06:17, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ****Should be good now Jonathan :)
 * 7) Imagecat
 * 8) *Why is the Imagecat included twice in article?--Kreivi Wolter 21:38, 8 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Could this image be used in the article?--Kreivi Wolter 10:19, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

The Clone Wars: Mouse Hunt

 * Nominated by:  Mauser  Comlink 00:05, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's not my fault, Kilson asked me to do this!

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Well, nonetheless, Nicely done :)  JangFett  Talk 00:50, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Nicely done Mauser, thanks for doing this. :) Kilson Likes PIE 18:59, 05 August 09 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) *We can now link to individual pages of the webcomic, so please reference accordingly.
 * 3) * Context on "Shinies".
 * 4) *Otherwise, good job. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 03:08, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **All done. Thanks for the review.  Mauser  Comlink 12:04, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***As I explained to Kilson and JangFett, not everything can be sourced to one page. The writer, penciller, etc. need to be sourced to the "inside cover" of the issue, while the issue number, "preceded by", and "followed by" fields in the infobox need to be sourced to the table of contents. Also check the BTS to make sure statements there are sourced to the correct page. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 04:40, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) The Grand Master
 * 8) * Actually, you do need to use the clones' numbers instead of names per this CT.
 * 9) **Adressed.
 * 10) *"asks Stripe for his opinion about the alert and wonders whether the officers do the same at every inspection just to drill the rookies." Do the same what? Please check grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:14, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Adressed. Thanks for the review.  Mauser  Comlink 17:21, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Please check again. You say he is wondering whether they "do the same" at every inspection, but you don't specify what it is he thinks they are doing. (i.e. what does he think they might be doing the same at each inspection?)
 * 13) After a second look, you're missing a quote for the plot.  JangFett  Talk 17:37, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *Do we need one?  Mauser  Comlink 17:46, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) **After Kilson's Procedure had been approved, someone gave me the suggestion of adding the tagline of the comic as the head quote and then a quote from inside the comic in the plot for Transfer, and since then I've been doing the same for other OOU TCW comics.
 * 16) ***Okay. Done.  Mauser  Comlink 17:58, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) This isn't an objection but, I see you use "Cody" and "Rex" instead of their designated Clone trooper serial numbers. i.e, CC-2224. Possibly you can use their numbers instead of their nicknames?  JangFett  Talk 00:53, 5 August 2009 (UTC)

Deppo

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 18:57, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Minor DE character, just to break up the string of TCW noms.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Great job. I enjoyed reading this. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 16:07, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) As did I. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:24, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Very good. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:45, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * He was an audacious youth but lacked the motivation to do anything outside of his own interests. It sounds similar to the last sentence, and doesn't really add anything new. I would just integrate the audacious bit into the previous sentence and kill the motivation bit. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:40, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Integrated. Thanks for the review. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 14:09, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) A passing objection
 * 5) * Have you checked the audio drama for an appearance? QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:47, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Yes I have, he's not in it. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 19:52, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

The Cors

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 20:51, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: No, not the band...

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:23, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I'm good now that the RPG thing has been clarified. ~ SavageBob 06:23, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * "Long" occurs three times in the biology and appearance section. Please change some. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:50, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Removed the middle long. --Eyrezer 10:33, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Does the CSWE entry canonize the standard version of the roleplaying scenario? If not, we should probably use the and  templates. ~ SavageBob 04:12, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *The thing with this one is that the variations don't change the main flow of events. Ie, the tribe will be relocated regardless of what action the players take. Likewise, whether or not the two other options occur, the main part doesn't change. This being the case, I don't feel it needs those templates. --Eyrezer 05:18, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Uroth

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 02:57, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Why the hell not? --~ SavageBob 02:57, 6 August 2009 (UTC)

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 03:24, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) The End is Near! SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:09, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Object

Comments
 * According to The Essential Atlas, the Wizar system is in Wild Space. --Eyrezer 03:24, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

The Clone Wars: Headgames

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Damn you, Kilson :P

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 13:48, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Damn me?! Thanks for doing this, Jinn. Kilson Likes PIE 20:11, 06 August 09 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) You're killing me:
 * 2) *"The Clone Wars: Headgames is a six-page web comic in The Clone Wars web comic series posted on StarWars.com on January 15, 2009." – Tense shift is killing me.
 * 3) **I think it's fine, actually.
 * 4) ***Objection will sit here until fixed. Graestan ( Talk ) 22:51, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Fine, fixed. But it would be nice to have some consistency with such articles. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 10:44, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *****Feel free to fix the poor tense shift in the other articles, then. This is English 101 here, Rule 1 at the top of this page: "well-written." Note I didn't look at those other articles. Graestan ( Talk ) 12:44, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * "On a planet" opening is killing me.
 * 8) **Fixed. I guess it's OK to use "unidentified" in OOUs
 * 9) ***That is correct. Graestan ( Talk ) 22:51, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * "discover what secrets it might hold" verbatim twice is killing me.
 * 11) **Rewored one in the bio.
 * 12) * Five ref tags to illustrate a point that two would support is killing me.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) *Behind-the-scenes needing organization and single-sentence paragraph are killing me.
 * 15) **For the first part, see above. The second is fixed.
 * 16) ***See above? As in what? Organize it; it's in bits and pieces with zero flow. Graestan ( Talk ) 22:51, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) ****I don't really understand what kind of "flow" do you expect. All previous web comic GAs followed the same concept with BTSes, which is, basically:
 * 18) *****a)Explain that it is a web comic.
 * 19) *****b)Say which episode it ties into.
 * 20) *****c)Talk about the TCW elements it introduces. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 10:08, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ****Nevertheless, I've merged two of the sentences together to, hopefully, make it flow better, but that's all I can think of. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:28, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * :P Graestan ( Talk ) 01:34, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * :P :P :P QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 09:25, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Though this may be a little late in the game, I would still encourage the people writing these TCW OOU articles to inclue Major character sections. If you ever decide to do so, take a look at the TOTJ article for how this is done. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 20:02, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Gibberous Crumb

 * Nominated by: Jinzler 17:28, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The less intelligent cousin of Salacious

(1 ACs/0 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 05:54, 10 August 2009 (UTC)

Object

Comments

3,955 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:14, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of FiolliProject: Time Travel, Phase 4

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  15:41, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Fiolli, I love you! I've long thought we should prosify our year articles but I never had the dedication/expertise to do so, so well done - it looks brilliant. I'm even tempted to write a year article myself (though it wouldn't be in the KotOR era ;-) ) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:06, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Very well done.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 05:06, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:31, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Great job, Fiolli! NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:58, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --Kreivi Wolter 08:28, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) * I think you should also add what year it was per the Great ReSynchronization. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:24, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Done. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:30, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *** What about adding it to the intro as well? QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:33, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ****Too much unnecessary baggage, that way, in the intro. The only reason why the date BTC was left was due to its immediate following of the Jedi Civil War and it being highlighted in TOR timelines. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:37, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *****Fair enough. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:38, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) The Grand Master
 * 7) * "Project" is repetitive in the beginning of the "Galactic Republic" section.
 * 8) **Varied word choice. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 18:23, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * "Within four years, Czerka Corporation began trying to usurp control over the project from the Ithorian herd. Other criminal organizations, such as the Exchange..." This implies that Czerka was also a criminal organization. If this is not so, then please rephrase. (If it is, then please forgive my naivety)
 * 10) **No problem. Reworded. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 18:23, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) *Great work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 12:36, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **Thanks, Jon. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 18:23, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

3,946 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:14, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Continuation of FiolliProject: Time Travel, Phase 4

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:43, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Mauser  Comlink 02:09, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) One thing:
 * 2) *The first sentence of the intro has too many "durings." Other than that, fabulous work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:53, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Whoops. :) Fixed. Thanks, Chack. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 18:24, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Korbel

 * Nominated by:  CC7567  (talk) 20:01, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: One of the few Wild Space-related articles I'm willing to do. About 520 words.

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support Object
 * 1) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 02:26, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 02:47, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) --Kreivi Wolter 09:30, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Excellent  JangFett  Talk 15:00, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) *You mention that Kenobi recovered, but there's no mention of whether or not Organa made a full recovery. Please add this (unless, of course, it's not stated in the source)
 * 3) *It sounds as if Korbel actually piloted the yacht himself, in which case his ability to pilot should probably be added to the p&t.
 * 4) *Great work, CC. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 13:19, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Would Category:Healers and doctors be appropriate? --Eyrezer 02:47, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Added.  CC7567  (talk) 03:09, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

Tactical droid (unidentified planet)

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 00:06, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My second GA nomination.

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 * 1) Fett
 * 2) *You must say "Around 22 BBY" rather than "In 22 BBY", due to the unestablished timeline. For the infobox, you need to say Circa 22 BBY, i.e, c. 22 BBY.
 * 3) *Intro needs minor expanding.
 * 4) *"Soon the tactical droid learned about the bunker, and, hoping to receive a valuable information about the Grand Army of the Republic, mounted his Single Trooper Aerial Platform, and led his droid forces to the bunker." This sentence is confusing. Anything from the first "and" to the second "and" needs rewording. Also "and" is repetitive in this sentence.
 * 5) *"By the time the tactical droid arrived to the bunker with his forces, Secura had hid herself into the bunker, and positioned her clone troopers to a nearby rock, where a marshal commander CC-5052 sighted the "target" tactical droid with electrobinoculars and signaled Secura that the droids were marching toward the bunker." Cut this sentence. Too much if occurring at the same time which makes it rather difficult to follow.
 * 6) *" The tactical droid ordered his droid forces to defend him, and quickly fled inside to the bunker." Quite confusing. I don't understand why he ordered his droid forces to defend him then he "went" into the bunker.
 * 7) *"As his forces were all destroyed, he tried to plan his next move, but this was interrupted by Aayla Secura, who confronted and decapitated the suprised tactical droid with her lightsaber, before the droid could trigger a cyberostasis in order to protect the informations in his memory banks." How were his droid forces destroyed? I'm also seeing a lack of build up with Secura's advance. The previous sentence states the tactical droid wanted his droid forces to defend him, but then in the next sentence, all his forces where destroyed&mdash;but by whom? and where where the droids?
 * 8) *"The unscathed head was then taken by Secura, who reunited with his clone troopers and prepared to transfer the head to a cruiser in order to analyze it with a robolobotomy and learn what informations it might hold." Is this really relevant? After the droid was destroyed, any information after its death should not be mentioned.
 * 9) *"Like all tactical droids, this droid was far more intelligent than standard battle droids of the Separatist Droid Army and wasn't controlled by a computer, allowing him to think and function independently." "standard", before battle droids, shouldn't be added, it gets too-pov orientated.
 * 10) *In the BtS, mention when the comic was released. To source it, see Procedure, Transfer, or Cold Snap
 * 11) *More to come :)  JangFett  Talk 15:24, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

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Leafar

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 12:58, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Thanks for for help with the research

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 * Can we get an infobox? ~ SavageBob 22:40, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, the only field that would have an entry is the name. I don't know that there is any hard and fast rule about it, but I think infoboxes are generally frowned upon if only very few fields are active. --Eyrezer 23:10, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * OK. I'll try to check out the rest of the article soon. ~ SavageBob 23:37, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Sorry, next question: How do we know these guys are a species and not an organization (like Black Sun) or a planet's people (like Corellians or Alderaanians)? ~ SavageBob 23:51, 9 August 2009 (UTC)

12,000 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:11, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Continuation of the FiolliProject. Enjoy this little nugget.

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Pliith

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 12:38, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: This one to keep the Yarin company

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