Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Battle of Borleias (Yuuzhan Vong War) (redux review)

Battle of Borleias (Yuuzhan Vong War) (redux review)

 * Redux comments: Sent to Redux per Meeting 40. Major rewrite; full review required.
 * Date added: February 12, 2011
 * Changes since last review: diff

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 * 1) Some starters
 * 2) * The article is quite long, so I actually think it could use some intro expansion.
 * 3) **Done. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 03:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) * It could use a link check too; from what I've seen it looks pretty sparse at the moment.
 * 5) **Went through and added a bunch. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 03:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 6) * I would place the navigation template below the external links&mdash;while the LG says succession boxes should be above the notes and references (thus above the external links), it doesn't say anything about navigation templates as far as I see. What do you think?
 * 7) **Yes, it looks better this way. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 03:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 8) *Will give it a thorough review after these have been fixed. 1358  (Talk)  17:33, February 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 9) Article requires confirmation for its name. The NEC does call it the "Battle of Borleias," but the article needs to somehow reflect that.  CC7567  (talk) 23:25, February 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 10) *There's no official source for calling it "Second Battle of Borleias (Yuuzhan Vong War)" or even Second Battle of Borleias. Wookieepedia came up with that title to distinguish it from the first and second battles of Borleias in the GCW and the first battle for Borleias in the YVW. I'm not sure what you want here . . . we can move it to Battle of Borleias since it's canonically called that, but that'll mean fixing a whole bunch of disambiguation pages and redirects. If that's what you're looking for, let me know. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 03:59, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 11) **Why don't you just move it to Battle of Borleias (Yuuzhan Vong War), which reflects the actual canonical title? Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:30, February 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Moved. The only page that linked to the original Battle of Borleias (Yuuzhan Vong War) redirect was this page. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 03:10, February 26, 2011 (UTC)
 * 13) ****The article has been moved, but so far that's all there's been to satisfy the objection&mdash;the naming throughout the article needs to be fixed too.  CC7567  (talk) 07:37, May 9, 2011 (UTC)
 * 14) *****Agreed and fixed. I didn't see this for awhile, sorry about the delay in addressing it. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 18:10, June 20, 2011 (UTC)


 * 1) Grunny:
 * 2) * Intro: "and additionally requisitioned additional military forces", I'd like to see additionally or additional changed given their close proximity.
 * 3) * New Republic capture of Borleias: "which had been used as a staging point for the assault on Coruscant by the Yuuzhan Vong and been granted to Domain Kraal." Since this is explained only two paragraphs above, does this need to be mentioned again?
 * 4) * New Republic capture of Borleias: "Having been driven from the galactic capital of Coruscant, elements of the New Republic's Fleet Group Three, without orders, attacked Borleias", "Knowing that refugees from Coruscant would head to Borleias, and wanting to take revenge on the Yuuzhan Vong, Fleet Group Three's leader, General Wedge Antilles, attacked the planet." I think these two sentences could be combined to reduce redundancy, as they appear to say the same basic fact (that Fleet Group Three attacked Borleias, just with slightly different context info). Thoughts?
 * 5) *I'll continue reading it in a few hours ad finish my review. grunny &#64; wookieepedia :&#126;$ 05:32, January 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) **I think I tweaked all of these as needed. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 18:52, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
 * 7) * Question: Since this edit removed a duplicate quote, are there any other suitable quotes for that section? grunny &#64; wookieepedia :&#126;$ 14:21, February 17, 2012 (UTC)
 * 8) **Added suitable quote. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 02:40, February 28, 2012 (UTC)


 * 1) Borleias
 * 2) * Since the battle takes up two entire novels, there really shouldn't be any quoteless sections. The BTS even has Allston's FAQ for fodder. Menkooroo (talk) 03:59, August 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) **Will address soon (tm) Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 05:14, August 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Added quotes. Nothing in Allston's FAQ is particularly compelling and related to the battle itself. Open to suggestions on that one. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 02:26, August 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 5) ****I are satisfied. Thanks for going hunting. BTW this will likely be on the FAN page soon and will stop gathering cobwebs. Menkooroo (talk) 02:31, August 11, 2012 (UTC)

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