Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Wam Lufba


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Wam Lufba

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 06:21, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Ah do declare this here article nominated.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 19:03, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:38, 24 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Blam! -- Ozzel 08:46, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:31, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Darn Yuzzum.  Greyman  @wikia ( Talk ) 02:10, 2 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:40, 8 June 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Blah blah:
 * 2) * Jabba should never be referred to as just "Desilijic;" only "Jabba."
 * 3) **I don't see why not, since it's his family name.
 * 4) ***"Desilijic" is his clan name. If anything, "Tiure" is his family name, but I don't think that's ever been used alone for any Hutt in an official source. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:59, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****My mistake. Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 23:31, 23 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * "Allowed" is used twice in the opening paragraph. Also, "do the actual hunting" looks a bit off to me; please try and find some alternative to "do." Actually, one of those "allowed to..."s should probably be axed.
 * 7) **Alterfied.
 * 8) * Shouldn't you just say that they were captured by a poacher, rather than doing it like the DB entry is?
 * 9) **Could, but I choose not to. I tend to tell the story as it occurs to the character.
 * 10) ***Fair enough, though I think it would look better changed.
 * 11) * There's a bit of extraneous detail about "Boushh" and Han which ought to be cut.
 * 12) **I've added a bit of relevance to that situation, but it was really there to explain the Carkoon situation.
 * 13) ***Better.
 * 14) *" Skilled in..." "Skilled in..." in the P&T. Please reword one of them.
 * 15) **Yarp, done.
 * 16) * I'm a bit wary of the use of "would" in the article. Not being a grammar expert, I may be wrong, though.
 * 17) **It's use is correct as far as I know, but I seem to be subconsciously obsessed with using it, which is more of a concern. Pared down, at any rate.
 * 18) **One of reasonably few interesting WTSes. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:45, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***I'd say that the duds are the rare ones, having roamed much of the WTS land. Sometimes, though, you come across a complete turd, like Greejatus. Thefourdotelipsis 08:55, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) Toprawa:
 * 21) * This reads literally that he was dismissed because he was regarded as a legitimate hunter, which isn't what you're trying to say, I understand. Please reword appropriately: "Dismissed as a legitimate hunter because of his size"
 * 22) **Reworded.
 * 23) * This reads kind of awkwardly considering those who had judged him previously weren't present at the moment to be proven wrong directly. Please reword this a little bit: "These peers were later proven wrong"
 * 24) **I've added "indirectly," but I think you can prove someone who's not present to be wrong. Like Nostradamus or whatever. :P Sing out if you think it needs rewording though.
 * 25) ***You're fine. I almost made the exact change, but thought I'd see what you would change it to Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:40, 2 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * I'm really not one to ever pick on images, since I'm rather image-handicapped myself, but the Jedi screen shot is kind of terrible. I'm sure someone could grab a cleaner and higher res version. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:04, 2 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) **I'll get someone on it, but he's really in the dark and poorly lit. The improvement might be minimal. Thefourdotelipsis 05:27, 2 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Culator has kindly replaced the image. Thefourdotelipsis 01:03, 8 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) ****Thanks. It's better than what it was. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:40, 8 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * There seems to be conflict in Lufba's databank entry whether the plural of Yuzzum is "Yuzzum" or "Yuzzums." The DB uses both. —Xwing328 (Talk) 19:03, 15 May 2008 (UTC)