Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tam Elgrin


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Tam Elgrin

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 04:03, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first-ever GA, over 1000 words, so I thought, "What the hell. I'll try it."

(4 Inqs/0 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Next time, though, make sure you copyedit more thoroughly, 'cuz I might not be able to fix everything. ;-)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:54, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Aaaallston!!! Cull Tremayne 00:55, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:01, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Thefourdotelipsis 23:13, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * The intro could be a little longer. Try expanding it from stuff relevant to Danni Quee and Tarc.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Contextify Antilles on first mention.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * P&T can be much, much larger. (And should be).
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) ***Yes, but you did so with a lot of redundant referencing. Not that I couldn't go in and fix it, but some lessons are better learned by experience. If two sentences in a row are referenced from the same source, there's no need to add additional tags. Additionally, the P&T doesn't flow well and could use restructuring. Take it slow, organize it well instead of rushing the fix. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:36, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Addressed, I hope.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:44, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *****There's a whole bunch on pages 159-162 of the paperback that could go in there. Take your pick, but in particular, some of Tser's comments are really good stuff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:53, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ******Well this objection was a doozy, wasn't it? :) Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 03:20, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * The relationship with the Solos, Tarc, and Elgrin should be expanded.
 * 13) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 23:27, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Due to my large knowledge of Enemy Lines, I was able to do a lot of cleanup myself, but be aware that there was lots needed. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:53, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) "However, by reviewing Elgrin's Coruscant recording, Danni Quee discovered that Elgrin's story was a lie; Elgrin was alone, and thus did not escape the Yuuzhan Vong." - A little bit of elaboration on how this conclusion was made would be appreciated. Thefourdotelipsis 03:18, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 02:45, 25 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) "Elgrin was an awkward man..." This is awkward. I don't like this wording (first sentence of P&T). Otherwise, good job.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  03:19, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) *All righty. Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:25, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) I was just sitting down to read this, but noticed I should leave preliminaries: The P&T is far too windy and seems to completely retell portions of the story. Please make it more concise and to-the-point.  Graestan ( Talk ) 06:54, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) *Addressed, I hope.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 02:45, 25 January 2009 (UTC)

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