Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Battle of Nexus Ortai


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Battle of Nexus Ortai
> QuiGonJinn (Talk) 15:49, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nominated by: <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Nomination comments: First TCW battle nom.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Mauser  Comlink 13:35, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Shipyards is actually the best of all TCW graphic novellas :P  JangFett  Talk 20:10, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 20:17, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 20:08, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:31, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:01, 3 August 2009 (UTC)

Object > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 18:28, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 17:07, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 17:01, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 13:29, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * You can expand the intro a little to make it proportionately to the battle.
 * 3) **Ok, I've expanded it a bit. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) * Missing sources. You need to source "c. 22 BBY" to the TCW novel, and then source the rest to Shipyards.
 * 2) **I don't think it is necessary. The opening text of Shipyards states that the events are happening "in the early days" of the Clone Wars, so that pretty much means c.22 BBY. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) ***I looked at the graphic novella as well, that should be fine then :)
 * 2) *Good work, I'll give it a another review soon :) <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Mauser:
 * 2) * I'm pretty sure Ghost Squadron is not the same as the Ghost Company. A proper article for the squadrom must be created.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * At least one more image for the article is needed.
 * 5) **Added one to the "aftermath" section. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) * Mauser  Comlink 10:32, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Attack of the Clone
 * 3) * In the last two sentences of the intro, I'm seeing a lack of specificity with the use of "that", and it would sound better if you try to word it more chronologically, i.e. "After Separatist reinforcements arrived, the Republic was forced to retreat" or something.
 * 4) **Addressed.
 * 5) * Are you sure that Grievous was commanding the Providence? As it was the only of its kind that arrived, it's probable that it was his flagship, but that's not enough evidence. Other than that, nice work.  CC7567  (talk) 23:11, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **You are right, there is no evidence. Should be fixed now. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)

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