User talk:Master Jonathan

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The Father
Hi there Jonathan! Hey, I just wanted to know if you could check this out. I'm working to make it an FA, and since I heard that you specialize in doing copy-edits, I thought it'd be a good idea to ask for your help. Just, I want to let you know that I will not be able to address your objections/suggestions in some time. Hope you can help me, and have a nice day!! Plagueis327 22:48, January 22, 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll be happy to take a look at it when I can, probably tomorrow as I may not get to it tonight. Master Jonathan Holocomm Monday, January 23, 2012, 02:21 UTC


 * Ok, thx!!!!!!!!!!!! :D Plagueis327 16:37, January 23, 2012 (UTC)


 * Alright, I just began to take a look at it, but there are several major problems that are preventing me from proceeding further at this time:
 * The article has significant problems with overlinking. Per Manual_of_Style, each article should be linked only once in each of the infobox, intro, and article, upon first mention in each. I removed a dozen duplicate links in the intro alone; the rest of the article has the same problem.
 * Please note that the plural of "Jedi" is "Jedi", not "Jedis".
 * "Upon discovering this, the Father decided that if there was going to be balance, Anakin needed to forget what he saw, and then proceeded to take him back to his monastery" Say what? Who proceeded to take who back to whose monastery? And if Anakin needed to forget it, what did the Father do about it? (Simply linking to memory rub doesn't cut it, as links don't show up on the printable version). Also, please read through the article one more time to look for any other sentences that don't quite make sense (there may or may not be any, but I want you to look anyway).
 * Watch your run-on sentences. I already broke up one in the intro, and there's a couple more further down that should be broken up as well.
 * With the Jedi, you use a mix of first and last names, which is incorrect, as first names alone should never be used except where multiple characters have the same last name, which isn't the case here.
 * I'm willing to help you out here, but my job is to help polish the article up, not to correct every major problem wrong with it, which is your job. Let me know when you've cleaned this stuff up and I'll take another look at it. Master Jonathan (Training Room) Monday, January 23, 2012, 18:35 UTC


 * Ok, I've resolved the "Jedis" typo. And I'll keep addressing your objections. Plagueis327 00:08, January 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * I have another question. Should I then name the three Jedi by their whole names every time I mention them? Like Anakin Skywalker instead of Anakin or Skywalker, Obi-Wan Kenobi instead of Kenobi or Obi-Wan and Ahsoka Tano instead of Tano? Plagueis327 00:23, January 24, 2012 (UTC)


 * Generally, full name should be used on first mention in each of the intro and body, and last name only thereafter. Also, please note that you should never strike another person's objection, as you did above; it is up to that person to strike it themselves if they feel it is properly addressed. This goes for the actual nomination pages too (don't worry, it's a common newbie error). On another note, why did you do this? Master Jon (Council Chambers) Tuesday, January 24, 2012, 01:27 UTC


 * Thought I should re-write the "Personality and Traits" section :P Plagueis327 02:24, January 25, 2012 (UTC)


 * OK, rewriting it is fine, but what I saw was the complete removal of several paragraphs that had a lot of valid information in it. Make sure you integrate that information back in when you rewrite it. Master Jon Training Room Wednesday, January 25, 2012, 02:32 UTC


 * Okay, I've followed your advice much as I could. Please check the article again and tell me if I need to do something else. Anyway, thank you for your assistance, it was quite helpful!!!!!!!! :) Plagueis327 20:14, February 6, 2012 (UTC)


 * I'm not seeing any improvement here. There are still significant overlinking issues in the body of the article; I count five links to Mortis Monastery and six to The galaxy. Many other articles are linked way too many times. Furthermore, no attempt was made to address the third or final objections above; in fact, you did the opposite on the last one, changing several last names to first names. I will look at the article again when an actual attempt is made to address my objections. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Council Chambers</b> Tuesday, February 7, 2012, 05:33 UTC


 * Okay, I'll work harder!! :D Plagueis327 14:41, February 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, I've erased many of those overlinking issues, and I'll get to work with the names later :P Plagueis327 15:10, February 7, 2012 (UTC)


 * Now it's underlinked. Articles linked in the intro (prior to the first ==header==) should be linked again in the body (after the first ==header==). Master Jonathan</b> War Room</b> Wednesday, February 8, 2012, 00:44 UTC


 * I think it is done. Plagueis327 03:33, February 8, 2012 (UTC)


 * OK, linking looks fine now. Take care of the other two objections and I'll take another shot at copy-editing this thing. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Training Room</b> Wednesday, February 8, 2012, 04:56 UTC


 * Thank you for the help, I'll keep working!!!!!!! :D Plagueis327 15:22, February 8, 2012 (UTC)

Re: Planet infobox
My mistake; thanks for the heads-up.  CC7567  (talk) 06:15, February 7, 2012 (UTC)

Darkstaff
Hi Master Jonathan, I was wondering if you would be willing to copy-edit the Darkstaff article for me? Thank you. --Jinzler 20:07, February 11, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> War Room</b> Monday, February 13, 2012, 03:22 UTC
 * Thank you! --Jinzler 16:34, February 13, 2012 (UTC)

Timeline videos
My apologies on removing the italics from the Timeline articles, hope it wasn't too much work to fix them. However, I would like to know why some publisher summaries are in italics and others are not, and also why some of the Timeline's have a Publisher's Summary heading while others have Plot or Synopsis headings.--This is my custom signature 01:56, February 15, 2012 (UTC)


 * Re-adding the italics was as simple as hitting the "undo" button on your edits, so no problem there. :) As for your question, publisher's summaries should always be in italics, while plot summaries written in our own words should not. Only the first twelve Timeline videos have actually been released, so we only have full publisher's summaries for those twelve. However, I now see that the "plots" on the other seven were lifted directly from their brief descriptions on the Timeline page, so I will be changing those to italicized publisher's summaries in a few minutes. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> War Room</b> Wednesday, February 15, 2012, 02:03 UTC

Bulduga
Could you give Bulduga a copy-edit?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 12:33, February 23, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Council Chambers</b> Thursday, February 23, 2012, 18:39 UTC


 * Thanks a lot.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 08:43, February 24, 2012 (UTC)

Taggart
Yes, it's me again. Could you give Taggart (Senate Guard) a copy-edit? By the way, is the current quote correct? (I'm unsure about the [sic!].)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 13:39, February 26, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. I removed the [sic], since that's only for unintentional spelling and grammar errors. Calling a female officer "sir" is not a grammar error, but rather a matter of decorum, so it doesn't get a [sic]. Let me know if you have any other questions. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Comlink</b> Sunday, February 26, 2012, 18:39 UTC


 * Ah, I understand. Thank you very much again, Jon.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:48, February 28, 2012 (UTC)

Wookieepedia at Celebration VI
Thanks! :D After missing the deadline two years ago, I didn't want us to miss out on it again this year. As for Wedge, well, it would have been a crying shame if that nom went down in flames after all that work, and I didn't want to see that happen, especially after all the work I put into my own review of the article. :) &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Training Room</b> Tuesday, February 28, 2012, 17:57 UTC
 * Wow, I didn't even see this when I gave you my cookie. XD MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg<sup style="color:green">(Whatever) 21:34, March 5, 2012 (UTC)

Awesome job!
MasterFred <sup style="color:green">(Whatever) 21:33, March 5, 2012 (UTC)

Well, thanks anyway. I'm always in the mood for cookies. Heck, I might bake some tonight. :) <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Council Chambers</b> Monday, March 5, 2012, 22:31 UTC

Draa
Hi, I was wondering if you could do a brief copyedit of Draa that's currently on my workbench before I move him to GAN. Lee's already done a thorough one so there should not be to much. Thanks, 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 18:58, March 13, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Two notes:
 * You have a lot of links to redirects, which is a no-no. I recommend you go to the Gadgets section of your preferences and select the second item on the list ("Highlight all redirect links orange") to aid you in fixing them.
 * Fixed, sorry about that... 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 17:04, March 14, 2012 (UTC)
 * In the BTS, you discuss the attribution of the "Buckle your belts" line. I'm not sure you have it right; after looking at the guide for myself, I think they're trying to say that Draa was given the line in the original script and implying that it was changed before or during production. I would suggest you ask someone else, such as our resident TCW expert, about this.
 * CC7567 seems to think it's an error on the guide part. I'll check the subtitles on the DVD version to see if there is any other info there. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 12:33, March 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * I've looked at the subtilted version of Weapons Factroy and it appears that it is the script that is wrong. The official script has Draa saying it whil Buzz is the actual one that says it. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 18:34, March 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * OK, then. Like I said, I wasn't sure; I just wanted you to check on it. :) <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Friday, March 16, 2012, 23:17 UTC
 * Otherwise, let me know if you have any other questions. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Wednesday, March 14, 2012, 00:44 UTC
 * Thanks for looking it over. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 17:04, March 14, 2012 (UTC)

Mission to Bogg 11
Could you give Mission to Bogg 11 a copyedit before I take it to GAN? Thanks, 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 15:45, March 16, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Jedi Council Chambers</b> Friday, March 16, 2012, 23:33 UTC

Jaina and Oric
Just dropping in to say thanks for catching my revert mistake on Oric, and also for working out the whole Jaina Solo's name thing (I haven't finished Apocalypse yet myself). Cheers, Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 22:03, March 20, 2012 (UTC)


 * No problem. I had clicked on a couple of your reverts to see what was going on, so I knew what you were doing, and an edit delta of +562 instead of -15 or -30 threw up a red flag. Glad to see you "caught on" and were more careful from that point on. :) <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Holocomm</b> Tuesday, March 20, 2012, 22:11 UTC

Random chit-chat
hey man are you a star wars collector?


 * Wookieepedia is not a social site. Please keep this page for discussion directly related to Wookieepedia itself. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Training Room</b> Friday, March 23, 2012, 20:12 UTC

Re:Essential Guide to Warfare and Wedge
Nothing new, though they do give Mala a last name of Tinero. I will move Mala`s page to the proper name and fix the link in the article. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 22:23, April 3, 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks. I'll get the rest of it; there's also a link in the intro, the prose needs to use her last name instead of first, and the name will have to be properly referenced. I appreciate the help. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Council Chambers</b> Tuesday, April 3, 2012, 23:31 UTC
 * Oh, sorry! I forgot you like the conversaion in one place. Sorry about that. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 23:46, April 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * That's OK; you're not the only one that does that. :) <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Tuesday, April 3, 2012, 23:47 UTC
 * I am going to change the topic to Mala for a moment. To get the "In needing of a update" off, should I go through and change all instances of "Mala" to "Tinero"? Thanks, 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 00:00, April 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * Essentially, yes. The first mention at the very beginning of the intro and body should give full name (as it already does), but thereafter she should be referred to by last name. First name only is considered informal when the last name is known. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Council Chambers</b> Wednesday, April 4, 2012, 00:04 UTC

Aftermath: reported problem with the spamfilter
Greetings good man, my name is Nicophorus and I'd like to thank you for your quick help with my report regarding the spamfilter. Everything went well - the link was added to the white list by an administrator and I was able to do the editing. I'll have to delete the report now, am I right, Master Jonathan? Thank you again and may the Force be with us all Nicophorus 20:36, April 4, 2012 (UTC)


 * Actually, leave the report in place. All comments on talk, forum, and other discussion places are public record and are not to be removed without archiving. Archiving of community process pages like the report page are generally handled by admins when the page begins to get a bit on the long side. There's no harm in leaving it there. Thanks for the report, though; the whitelist is brand new, still in development, and nowhere near comprehensive, so reports like yours help build it. :) <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Thursday, April 5, 2012, 00:58 UTC

Re: CVI
Actually, that would be a humongous help. Currently, I'm trying to find people who are carpooling on TFN (started a thread), and since I had just received food stamps, that will also help me save some money. If I can save $100 each month, I will have plenty to travel and a bit to spend, so that's my goal currently. Here's hoping it happens!  Trak Nar  Ramble on 03:53, April 13, 2012 (UTC)

CT-4/619
I was just wondering if you could give CT-4/619 a copy edit before I take it to GAN. Also, I have found some new info for Wedge in Warfare in other places than the bio (Fourth Battle of Kuat), so I'll add it as soon as I get time. Thanks, 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 12:53, April 14, 2012 (UTC)


 * CT-4/619 is done. Be sure to reload the infobox before taking it to GAN. Let me know if you have any questions. As for Wedge, if you could give me a summary of the new information, I can add it myself. Thanks. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">War Room</b> Saturday, April 14, 2012, 16:53 UTC


 * "In 8.5 ABY, < ref name="Atlas">The Essential Atlas shortly after Zsinj had been defeated, Antilles, along with Airen Cracken and Ral'Rai Muvunc, produced the plan to conquer the vital shipyard of Kuat's Kuat Drive Yards, protected by the strong Kuati Sector Forces. Republic aligned astromechs inserted into KDY's droid pool loaded a coded virus onto the Kuati Event Horizon and four other Stardestroyer's networks. With the upload complete, the RZ-1 A-wing composed Surprise Squadron was signaled to, and jumped to the Kuat system. Surprise Squadron's ion torpedoes soon took down the Luminous's and three other warship's systems, while the virus encrypted on the infected warships caused them to lock down their hangars and turn their guns on the remaining Kuati warships. When Muvunc hailed the Kuati officials and revealed that the New Republic controlled 34 percent of KDY via shares, the officials were forced to secede Kuat from the Empire as they faced an enemy who could take out nine warships from their defense fleet in a matter of minutes. In this way Antilles and the others pulled off a major victory without the death of a single pilot.< ref name="War">The Essential Guide to Warfare "


 * This is all the content of the fourth battle of Kuat involing Wedge. You can trim it down if you want as there is nothing relating to Wedge other than him planning it out. The links will have to be looked at also as I am not sure if you already have them linked the entire Wedge article. Also, I've deliberately added a space between < and the rest of the reference so as it does not mess up your talk page with the annoying red warning. (I assumed you did not want your talkpage sourced :)). Thanks for all the copyedits.  501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 23:47, April 14, 2012 (UTC)


 * OK, I basically just copied that with some copy-editing. I didn't check for duplicate links too hard; I don't think anybody's going to get out of shape over a few duplicate links in a 600+ KB article. Thanks for the help. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Sunday, April 15, 2012, 00:37 UTC

The Insiders
Hey, MJ. I'm wondering if I can ask you a favour. Apparently, Noa Briqualon is mentioned in Star Wars Insider 89 "Ask Lobot/Ask the Master" feature. Is there any chance you could let me know what it says? Unfortunately, I'm not sure where in the issue the column is. I doubt if it'll be anything more than a quick mention, though. Menkooroo 05:05, April 28, 2012 (UTC)


 * There it is. Apologies for the delay in replying; I was at an amusement park yesterday. Have fun! <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Holocomm</b> Sunday, April 29, 2012, 16:27 UTC
 * Holy crap! That is fantastic. Thanks so much for the effort you put into transcribing it. And no need to apologize for a one day delay at all. :D Thanks again! Menkooroo 06:02, April 30, 2012 (UTC)

Whrr
Could you give Whrr a copyedit? Thanks, 501st  dogma ( talk ) 22:27, May 7, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Training Room</b> Tuesday, May 8, 2012, 00:41 UTC


 * Thanks for looking it over. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 20:10, May 8, 2012 (UTC)

Wegdge and Warfare, again....
Hi, just thought I let you know I found some more new Wedge material, but not much. Here's the excerpt (its the intro to a part on Baron Fel, remebered by Wedge).

"In this excerpt of Voren Na'al's Oral History of the New Republic, recorded shortly before the Liberation of Coruscant, Wedge Antilles remebers Soontir Fell, then thought to be dead. In reality, Fel had joined Trawns's Empire of the Hand." pg.136

The section is basicaly how Wedge knew Fel, though it should be in the article that Vorun recorded Wedge's thoughts on Fel for his works. You will have to probally just make a sentence out of the info above. Hope that helps, 501st  dogma ( talk ) 23:52, May 8, 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks. Does it give an in-universe date as to when his thoughts were recorded? <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Tuesday, May 8, 2012, 23:55 UTC


 * No it does not, but Antilles believes Fel's dead in the article, if thats any help as to putting an aprox date to it. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 00:06, May 9, 2012 (UTC)


 * OK, thanks. I'll have to read through the article and figure out where it would best be placed. I still can't get it through the library; there's two copies listed in the interlibrary loan system now, but they're both out, and I can't put a request on something through that system unless it's just sitting on the shelf waiting to be checked out, meaning I have to wait for all local requests to be fulfilled first. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Jedi Council Chambers</b> Wednesday, May 9, 2012, 02:32 UTC


 * "In this excerpt from Voren Na'al's Oral History of the New Republic, recorded shortly before the Liberation of Coruscant, Wedge Antilles remembers Soontir Fel, then thought to be dead." jSarek 05:36, May 9, 2012 (UTC) EDIT: Whoops, I see you already have that quote. I guess it's bedtime for this sleepy guy. jSarek 05:38, May 9, 2012 (UTC)


 * Did you get a good night's sleep? :P Actually, the repeat quote was helpful, because it made me read it again and see the obvious indication of chronological placement that I somehow missed before. So thanks. :) <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">War Room</b> Wednesday, May 9, 2012, 16:12 UTC


 * You're welcome. :-) That was why I posted it; when I saw afterward that it was already here, I assumed you were looking for mention of a specific year or other precise metric. jSarek 04:44, May 10, 2012 (UTC)


 * Wait; which Liberation of Coruscant? Does it indicate which one? I'm not all that familiar with this era. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Jedi Council Chambers</b> Thursday, May 10, 2012, 04:49 UTC


 * The first on that page. Both of the latter ones come after Soontir was discovered to be alive and well in the Empire of the Hand. jSarek 06:41, May 10, 2012 (UTC)


 * Inserted in the article. Thanks to both of you. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Comlink</b> Thursday, May 10, 2012, 19:33 UTC

Second Pius Dea Crusade
Regarding the TC, you do realize that the Second Pius Dea Crusade is not explicitly mentioned in the EGW either? You added your support to its CAnom, and I was just wondering whether that one should be included in the TC. Cade  Calrayn   18:23, May 11, 2012 (UTC)


 * The second has unique information that is about it specifically (it targeted the Hutts), and is therefore sufficiently notable. The others that I nominated don't appear to have any such unique info. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">War Room</b> Friday, May 11, 2012, 23:03 UTC

Tirs Maldane
Could you give Tirs Maladane a copyedit? I am not quite sure how to refer to him other than "he" with his gender not revealed. Thanks, 501st  dogma ( talk ) 00:08, May 15, 2012 (UTC)


 * Copy-edit done. If a character's gender is not known, then you have to find other ways of referring to that character. You cannot use "he or "she" unless the character is known to be that gender, and the singular they (more specifically in this case, epicene they) is heavily debated as to its acceptability, with the Chicago Manual of Style listing it as inappropriate for formal writing (e.g. an encyclopedia), so I would recommend avoiding it as well. You will simply have to find other methods of referring to him, such as his rank/job ("the lieutenant gunner"), his homeworld ("the Tatooine native"), etc. It's difficult to dance around a lack of gender, but that's what you have to do here. Let me know if you have any other questions. <b style="color:navy; text-decoration:underline; font-family:serif;">&mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> <b style="color:red; font-variant:small-caps;">Training Room</b> Tuesday, May 15, 2012, 02:20 UTC

Comet
Could you give Comet a copyedit please? I am moving him to the FAN page. I am not sure about the quality of the writing, since I wrote it a while back! :) Thanks, 501st  dogma ( talk ) 21:35, May 16, 2012 (UTC)