Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Disabled Trade Federation base


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Disabled Trade Federation base

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 23:17, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's a trap!

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 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Intro could use some expansion.
 * 3) * Unsourced infobox items.
 * 4) **Nixed.
 * 5) * Punctuation before refs.
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) * Linking.
 * 8) **Some more linked.
 * 9) * I'm not entirely sure what controls the base's defences just from reading the article? Is it that the Central Control Computer normally controls it, but the base is also capable of running independently? Or was the entire thing about Comm 4 having any part in its operation a ruse? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:31, October 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Thanks for catching all that. The situation should be more clear now regarding the control. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 16:31, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Better but now you say that it was reactivated without ever mentioning what caused it to deactivate. Also, is it known what allowed it to reactivate? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:42, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) * Prior to attacking the base, This is notable. Instead of using it as context, it should be directly stated that the Naboo planned a strike against the base.
 * 13) **Expanded.
 * 14) ***Not fixed, on second reading. I should be stated directly. Basically, you should say that the underground formulated a plan to attack the base. Then you can talk about Comm 4 as you have done. The gunboat and slave camp free-ing can be talked about later, with the mention of Gavin Sykes. I think this would streamline the article. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:02, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) ****How is that? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:39, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * How much control does the CCC actually have over this base? Does it entirely control it, or does it give only "commands"? This could be clarified in characteristics.
 * 17) **Here's what we know. The TF has a 'comm web' and Comm 4 is part of it. Destroying comm 4 will disrupt the web and force the base to hibernate. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:51, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Then this should be more specifically noted in the article. If there isn't much detail on a subject, or if it's vague, just say what the source says. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:33, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****How does it read now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:06, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * After a running battle, most of the base would lie in rubble. Lieutenant Gavyn Sykes blew up the shield generator protecting the command center. For the base to lie in rubble, wouldn't the second sentence have to occur first? Also, could you reword the first sentence? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:42, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) **Reworded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:51, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) * How come there's no mention of the Neimodian population in the body?
 * 23) **Does it flow now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:39, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) * The River article says he came downriver, but this article says he went up it. Which is correct?
 * 25) **According to dialogue, upriver. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:39, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) ***The characteristics section is very clean now. But I think that's a contradiction. I the games' case, they used the word to describe just going along the river, however, its general meaning is "towards the source". I know you're just taking it verbatim, but perhaps if you just changed it to "down the river"? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:11, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) ****Okay, so changed.
 * 28) * After destroying Comm 4, the Naboo pilots descended from orbit and began their sorties against the base, and the Federation defenses reactivated and commenced firing on the Naboo ships. Split the sentence. Also, if the reason for the reactivation is unknwon, could you at least add in "unexpectedly reactivated" to make it clear?
 * 29) *I'm beginning to question the name of the article. It wasn't truly disabled, nor was it always disabled. Could it be renamed?
 * 30) **Only if I have to move it once. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:12, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Hmmm? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:11, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) ****What I mean is, if you tell me specifically what to move it to, I will. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower
 * 33) *****There's quite alot of freedom with conjecture names; something simple like "Trade Federation base (Naboo)" would do. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:10, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) * The article says that it was located near the mouth of the river. Are you sure you don't mean to headwaters? The mouth is where it ends (I believe that's the swamp).
 * 35) **I suppose. It just starts at the end of the canyon and flows all quite a ways. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:12, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) *I know I'm being picky here, but I'm just trying to make the article as clear as possible :) It's getting there. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:02, October 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Once again, Soresumakashi has forced my CA to go to GA status. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:51, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Look on the bright side :D SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:02, October 8, 2010 (UTC)