Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Drokko Kira


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Drokko Kira

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 05:57, January 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: In Okinawa, all Miyagi know two things: fish and karate.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  13:39, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 07:17, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:55, January 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 20:33, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:09, January 31, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Nayayen-san
 * 2) * There are quite a few instances of a comma just before an "and" which, if I'm correct, is grammatically incorrect. I fixed some that I was certain about but I didn't do all of them for lack of wanting to mess things up.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * "Kira became locked in a sort of stupor" A sort of stupor? Eh? Can you be a little less vague?
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) *You sourced it to the actual issues this time! :P  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  22:53, January 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Blacklist:
 * 8) * Drokko became a member of the Republic with the rest of the Beast Riders after the Battle of Iziz, so the appropriate infobox should be used since he was no longer a criminal.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * "For this, he was banished from Iziz, sustaining an unhealing wound in the process." Who was banished from Iziz? Freedon Nadd?
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) * Why didn't he speak again for 50 years? If it was because of the unhealthy wound he suffered, that needs to be specified.
 * 13) **The two are not actually linked in the source material. It just says he has not spoken in 50 years.
 * 14) * "That scenario ended up occurring..." Surely you can do better.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) * "Suddenly, a fire not seen in fifty years flamed into Drokko Kira's eyes..." Flowery prose.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) * That's all. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 00:03, January 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) * Missing sources. This problem is getting old. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:50, January 18, 2010 (UTC)

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