Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Taspan II

Taspan II

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 02:17, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Back to attack!

(3 ACs/2 User/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 03:42, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:28, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Pranay Sobusk  ~  Talk  09:27, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Cylka  -talk- 01:35, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 07:43, 26 February 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 2) * Linking.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Layout Guide. You could actually make Inhabitants and Locations sections, or perhaps merge them, since they'd both be pretty spare, into a section with an innovative title.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Infobox: "Primary terrain – Asteroids" – Really? Please be more specific. Also, lose the unneeded bullet.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * Big Crush needs context in the intro. The nature of the facility should be provided, as well, to set it up.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * Description section needs to be either worded more vaguely, focusing on the form of the planet before and after the accident, or infused with context for nearly all subjects. I'd honestly choose the latter.
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) * History probably needs to be two paragraphs, for the stuff before the novel and then what happened during the novel.
 * 13) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 03:11, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * Graestan ( Talk ) 04:44, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Pranay
 * 16) * I'm not totally sure, but don't destroyed planets get an era tag, because they're not timeless like the other planets? If so, add this.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) * Could you make metion of the Taspan system and Taspan in the description section. Currently it's only in the infobox and/or the intro.
 * 19) **Addressed.
 * 20) * Please expand the intro a bit and write for example about the gravity well projectors that were tested in the facility or about the role in the battle of Mindor. At the moment, it's a bit short. Otherwise, good work.  Pranay Sobusk  ~  Talk  19:40, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:52, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 23) * General expansion, please. This article, especially the intro, seems way too short.
 * 24) **Addressed.
 * 25) * The Big Crush needs more context in the intro and Description. Additionally for the intro: the testing of gravity well projectors, the planet's "participation" in the Battle of Mindor and the destruction of the system, and Mindor itself should all be mentioned, along with the appropriate context.
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) * Battle of Mindor needs context in History. A bit more context on Mindor itself would be nice.
 * 28) **Addressed.
 * 29) * "Remaining stations on these fragments emitted hard radiation and flares, which tore through Mindor, destroying its surface." - I'm pretty sure it was the impact of the asteroids on the star that created the radiation and flares that destroyed Mindor. Also, the destruction of Mindor could probably be expanded upon.
 * 30) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:18, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) *Otherwise, it's good. Please make sure to check on my comment below. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 20:38, 17 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm pretty sure that, near the end of the book, there's a different explanation given by Blackhole for the destruction of Taspan II. Might want to check on that, Floyd. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 21:16, 13 February 2009 (UTC)