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Mohs

 * Nominated by: Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Pure Lando Calrissian Trilogy pyramid-power crack. Check your laws of physics at the door - you're in for a wild, wild ride.

(3 Inqs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Had no trouble with this when it was up for GA. Cull Tremayne 09:52, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Just read this book for the first time.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:58, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Me too. Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) No picture, but still I support! Enochf 23:55, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Dark Lord Trayus 01:04, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The last section of the biography, and its corresponding part in the intro, stray really far from the subject. The focus should stay on Mohs, with the Lando/Vuffi plot only in there for context on his story. Related to that, it also seems to be written in Vuffi's and Lando's perpective; you have comments like "revealed to be a Sharu", and the part where Lando returns to the ship to find what Mohs has become. It should be kept in the perspective of Mohs, so you talk about him changing into the other form and waiting for Lando in the Falcon. - Lord Hydronium 03:26, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I think I've addressed this. Yrfeloran 07:56, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) In addition to Hydro's objection, the part where the perspective leapt out to me the most was when Mohs and Vaa "vanished" from Calrissian's sight. So, per Hydro. Thefourdotelipsis 09:19, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Specific objection addressed. Yrfeloran 07:56, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) From Xwing328:
 * 6) *Around the "Within the great pyramid" section: The previous sentence says they were transported into the pyramid. The next sentence says Mohs falls through the wall, and then Lando arrives. Could this method of transportation be clarified? Are they just falling through a wall or being beamed in?
 * 7) **I've misplaced my copy, so I really can't say. The whole series of events is a little obscure, IIRC. Yrfeloran 03:53, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *Possibly a link to Mohs' mother.
 * 9) *You say the Falcon fled the system. This could use a touch of context, imo, but not too much to make the article focus more on Lando than Mohs. Were they running from something in particular, was the world being destroyed in its transformation, what? —Xwing328 (Talk) 01:54, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Toprawa:
 * 11) *A preliminary objection: I'm not a big fan of alternating between calling him a Sharu and a Toka between the infobox and the first sentence of the introduction, despite the pipelink. It's just confusing, and I would request choosing one or the other for uniformity.Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **Eh, okay. How's this? Yrfeloran 04:38, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) ***No change has been made, if that's what you're referring to. Toprawa and Ralltiir 08:04, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Hmm...an edit must have been dropped. I've fixed this now.Yrfeloran 03:53, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Cav's mohs-ings:
 * 16) *I think some explanation about the relationship between the Sharu and Toka peoples, and the fact that they were one and the same needs to be made explicitly clear in the intro.
 * 17) **I've done some tweaking. Yrfeloran 03:53, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) *Context for Rokar Gepta and Fabled Key needed in intro, and in the bio.
 * 19) **I've added some context Yrfeloran 03:53, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Still need context for Gepta. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:17, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) *Explanation of the Sharu-Toka connection may needed in the first paragraph, in my opinion; its confusing to introduce him as a High Singer of the Sharu, and then call him a Toka in the next sentence. Consistency is needed; refering to him as a Toka up until the point he discovers that he is a Sharu - with the required explanation therein - may work as well.
 * 22) *Why are the Sharu species presumed extinct?
 * 23) * When another altercation distracted Calrissian - Another altercation? When was the first, and is it important?
 * 24) **Tweaked this.
 * 25) *Why had the police detachment been sent to capture Calrissian?
 * 26) * Some context on the Great Lock would be appreciated, and how it is used to gain entrance to the pyramid. I presume the Fabled Key is used, but you haven't stated as such.
 * 27) *You mention that Vuffi Raa betrayed Lando in the intro, but you have no mention of it in the bio.
 * 28) **That's because another objector asked me to take it out...Yrfeloran 03:53, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) ***A brief mention in the bio would probably be acceptable, but not to the lengths that you had it originally. Either that, or take out the mention in the intro. There should be no info in the intro that isn't in the bio. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:17, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) * You mention an ancient computer system - more information on this is needed, as it triggers a significant event. Also, since it - according to the PT - is responsible for directing Mohs somewhat, it needs to be introduced and explained far earlier in the bio, possibly at the beginning.
 * 31) **This is stuff that is really not adequately explained in the book. A lot of crazy stuff happens with no explanation at all except for the presumption that the Sharu did it. Yrfeloran 03:53, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) *The relationship between the Toka intelligence and the life-orchards should be addressed in the bio as well. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:50, 24 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) **Still some stuff to be worked on. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:17, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) A few more images should be added. One of Lando and/or Vuffi Ra, and one of Geptu come to mind. --Eyrezer 12:03, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * There's got to be some sort of award for "most consistently traitorous sidekick". Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Lando Calrissian

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:35, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: From the two directors that brought you Tales of the Jedi and Wraith Squadron! From the project behind Jaina Solo! From the minds behind Mara Jade Skywalker, an action-packed adventure filled with suspense, betrayal, romance, and, of course, inimitable charm. Now playing: The smoothest FAN ever to grace this page, Lando Calrissian!

(2 Inqs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) As co-nominator. Greyman ( Talk ) 20:45, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Objections will be fixed soon as sources are checked by several users, including myself.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:29, 22 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Imperialles 23:56, 24 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) This article is supported by Mecenarylord on 23:12, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) CC7567  [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 00:30, 15 March 2009 (UTC)

I dare object to Lando
 * 1) No info whatsoever from Lando Calrissian: Idiot's Array and Crisis on Cloud City. Not smooth. Thefourdotelipsis 03:04, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The latter has been addressed; I've asked Borsk about the former. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Former is also addressed now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ditto Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin. - Lord Hydronium 03:10, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I've went ahead and added a sentence or two of some background information for this objection. I looked over my copy of the source again and couldn't see anything new beyond the sentences I just added. Is there something specific you're thinking of that I could work in? Greyman ( Talk ) 13:51, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ** There's some other bits on pages 50, 76, and 88. - Lord Hydronium 08:27, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Information added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * The mentions of Ymile are rather confusingly arranged. There's a picture of her near where Lando wins the bet with Raynor, but no reference to her in the text, then much later in the article it mentions she helped Lando win. That second part should be noted and clarified at the time it actually occurs; also, she should be linked there, since she isn't at the moment. - Lord Hydronium 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Succession box should include Treece; Action Tidings and the Cloud City Databank entry both say he was the Administrator of Cloud City. - Lord Hydronium 00:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fixed the Ymile bits and buffed Lady Luck overall. Also, adjusted succession box, reffed from the actual Marvel comics though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:15, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Information missing on how Lando got back Cloud City, from The New Essential Guide to Characters. Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds not in; amongst the things to add is a bit in there about how Lando raised Tibanna profits that's also in the NEC. - Lord Hydronium 07:29, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **The Tibanna profits bit is already in there, just referenced from another source. The Cloud City re-taking has been added. Still working on GATOW. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Two tidbits from GATORW added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:41, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Added it to the "Sources" list as well. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) ***Oh, I see; I was searching for "percent". - Lord Hydronium 19:52, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * More NEGTC tidbits: Lando giving control of Cloud City to the Ugnaughts after Zorba cedes it. Lando refusing to go to Chewbacca's funeral out of guilt. From GG3: Lobot convinced Lando to help Leia and the group. - Lord Hydronium 07:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **All of the above fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *More missing sources: Rebellion Era Sourcebook, Roleplaying Game Revised Core Rulebook, Roleplaying Game: Saga Edition Core Rulebook , Dark Empire Sourcebook, The Truce at Bakura Sourcebook, Han Solo and the Corporate Sector Sourcebook (I just spotted a small mention, but there could be more) , Heir to the Empire Sourcebook, The Last Command Sourcebook, and Star Wars Trilogy Sourcebook - Special Edition . For now. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ** Rebellion Era Sourcebook is listed now, but it needs information from it. There's some on Page 111, for a start. - Lord Hydronium 07:01, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***The info on that page was already in the article. Could you tell me what specifically you are referring to? And the rest of the sourcebooks have been checked and added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:18, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) *I had a whole thing for here before, a giant list of every piece of information I could find from these sources that was missing. Then my text editor crashed, so here's a much more general list. The Cloud City section from the RESB has information on Lando's neutrality. The RCR talks about him getting his fortunes and smuggling arms to the Rebellion. DESB needs a ton of information from it. Read the whole thing. Lando's section, Wedge's section, an inset in the Coruscant section, and the Star Destroyer section have major information missing from the article—everything up to Lando crashing on Coruscant is missing. The sourcebooks for HTTE and Dark Force Rising have important information in their Lando sections, as well as the Nkllon section of the former and Lady Luck section of the latter. Dark Force Rising overall needs major expansion. It barely touches on their capture by Garm, the entire search for the fleet, and the battle for the Katana. The first paragraph if the SOTE section is extremely vague and needs expanding; nothing is said about how Rendar is guiding them or how he abandons them, or where the Imperial forces come from. My recommendation would be to withdraw the nom for now. It's missing too much major information from too many major sources. Dark Empire Sourcebook alone is a huge chunk not included, and with all that's been found, I frankly don't trust that this article is near complete. My advice would be to remove it, to read or reread all the sources thoroughly, rework the article, and then renom it when it's in a more complete state. - Lord Hydronium 03:29, 10 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) **Major buffs to SOTE and DFR completed. Will go through the other TTT-related sourcebooks soon. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:54, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Major buffs to HTTE Sourcebook completed, minor buff to Rebellion Era Sourcebook. If you want more information from that source, I'll need a page number, because I just read through the entire thing and found a whopping one sentence of minor information. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:11, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) ****RESB's good. - Lord Hydronium 23:20, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) * for The Truce at Bakura, but it contains unique information to add. - Lord Hydronium 23:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) *In addition to the above, the following appearances and mentions are missing: Out of the Closet: The Assassin's Tale, Darksaber, Force Heretic I: Remnant, Therefore I Am: The Tale of IG-88, Payback: The Tale of Dengar, The Last One Standing: The Tale of Boba Fett, X-wing: Rogue Squadron, X-wing: Wedge's Gamble, X-wing: Wraith Squadron, Young Jedi Knights: Heirs of the Force, Young Jedi Knights: The Lost Ones, Young Jedi Knights: Lightsabers, Young Jedi Knights: Darkest Knight, Young Jedi Knights: Shards of Alderaan, Young Jedi Knights: Jedi Bounty, and Young Jedi Knights: The Emperor's Plague. - Lord Hydronium 01:17, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) **Chack and I have addressed these. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Force Heretic I has a bit about Lando from Jaina's childhood. Find text-searchable versions of these (ask on IRC if you need a source) and search through them for "Lando" or "Calrissian", please, because if the article's missing information from one, there's a chance it's missing from the others. - Lord Hydronium 03:29, 10 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) ****No, no. You see, I did find that information when I went through and used text-searchable versions of these the first time. I just decided that particular tidbit was too anecdotal for inclusion in an encyclopedia article. However, if you're set on seeing "Calrissian also taught Jaina Solo to enjoy altha protein drinks during her childhood" in the article, I will add it, despite how trivial it seems. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:17, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) *****By itself that tidbit might be too anecdotal, but I think the fact that Lando had more interaction with Jaina in her youth than just going on a mission with her is worth something. - Lord Hydronium 19:08, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) ******After our discussion in IRC, I did a little more YJK research and added a paragraph about their interactions in general. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:58, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) *Almost forgot: None of the movie novelizations or radio dramas are included. - Lord Hydronium 01:19, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **This particular objection has been addressed, along with adding a number of other ESB and ROTJ-related appearances. I've checked both novelizations and will check with Tope to make sure there's no new info in the radio dramas. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:19, 1 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) **Han will have these objections down! We've gotta give them more time! (In all seriousness, we are working on these). Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:40, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) * Sorry, haven't checked those yet, but another: Galaxywide NewsNets from Adventure Journal 14. "Calrissian Resurfaces as Baron Administrator". - Lord Hydronium 06:36, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) **Mined. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:45, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) *Wretched Hives of Scum and Villainy, page 13, bottom left. - Lord Hydronium 05:02, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) Gah, redlinks in source list, mine Databank and Wizards. Those first two totally slipped me mind.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) *Red links busted. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:56, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) *Databank has been mined and source list updated. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:32, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) Infobox not fully/correctly sourced.  Graestan ( Talk ) 04:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) *I think I got the missing reference. If you desire other sourcing, please let me know. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:22, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) **Got it on the second try. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) I'd like to take Yrf's comment below and turn it into an actual objection; for instance, I know there are quotes to be had by or about Lando and/or what he was up to at the time for the LCA, TTT, and BFC. Ideally, since the sections are so long, each should probably have a quote.  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:48, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) *All sections now have quotes except three tiny sections in the "Non-canon appearances" section in the BtS since quotes do not exist for those parts. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:32, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 47) **Hope you found at least one funny one from LCA. ;) Graestan ( Talk ) 23:12, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Lando91.jpg, Image:LanLukVil.jpg, Image:Weaklando.jpg, Image:Lando&Luke Marvel71.jpg and Image:Lando&Han captive.jpg could all do with a re-scan. Other than that, excellent work, and about time! :) --Imperialles 13:08, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *All done. I was bored and Ataru mentioned it at the right time. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:16, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Image placement is irrelevant to the text in a number of locations. SinisterSamurai 07:32, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *I've moved a few things around. As it stands, there are two images that aren't directly pertinent to the sections they are in: the Caamas Document crisis section, and in the Kessel investment sections, where we used generic Lando images to fill gaps that would have left lots of text with no complimentary images. As it is, there's a good balance of images to compliment the text, but by removing those, the article's appearance would suffer accordingly. And there is article precedent for using generic images to fill "gaps". If there were more relevant images that could be substituted in, just point me in their direction and I'll gladly change it, but for now, it should stay as it is. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:03, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Looks good.
 * 5) Needs info from Star Wars: Power of the Jedi. Thefourdotelipsis 08:54, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:55, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Eyrezer
 * 8) * The Young Calrissian comic is listed in the Non-canon section of the appearances, but is in the main body without any special tags. It should be consistent one way or the other. If, as it looks like, the story is mentioned in the CSWE, then I suggest it gets moved out of the non-canon section of the appearances. I also suggest that the reference to YC have a note added along the lines of: "This story was canonized by inclusion in the Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia." His ship from this story could also get a mention in the Ships section later on. --Eyrezer 11:00, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **It doesn't seem to be mentioned in CSWE, according to Chack. I've added in non-canon tags in the main body, will get to the ships section soon. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:50, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) ***Correction. Our page seems to list the comic as canon, so I'll check and see if I can find where it was canonized. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:53, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ****Purpilia added CSWE as a source on the Meek page, which is what I was going by. Probably not mentioned in Lando's article itself, though. --Eyrezer 09:24, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) *****Yeah, I've fixed just about all the objection, need to add the ships section, though. ships section added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:28, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) ******Great. With the Meek story, doesn't the CSWE say it was reported by HNN sources? This should be added, in a way that reflects the potential ambiguity or unreliability of the account that seems to be suggested in the Encyclopedia entry. --Eyrezer 14:03, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *******That's exactly what CSWE reports. I've updated the article to reflect that. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:36, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) * Osuno Whett is reintroduced too abruptly in the ThonBaka section. It needs to be explained how/why he was there.
 * 16) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:24, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) * Did Bria change her mind? I thought it might have always been her plan to rip off the smugglers.
 * 18) **Rebel Dawn and our Tharen article are ambiguous at best. I've ambiguified it also in the Lando article correspondingly. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:12, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * "Shortly thereafter, Calrissian found himself on another treasure hunt sponsored by a trio of Hutts eagerly hunting the fabled Yavin Vassilika, a priceless, gemlike statuette, having been saved by Bib Fortuna after losing a game of sabacc." This makes it sound as though the Vassilika was saved by Fortuna.
 * 20) **Reworded. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:24, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) * Are you certain about the placement of the Ruins of Dantooine stuff? It would make so much more sense if it didn't interrupt his trip to Bespin...
 * 22) **Well, the Galaxy of Fear stuff happened in 7 months ABY, and Lando doesn't win Cloud City until after 2 ABY, according to AJ 14, which is set circa 2 ABY according to my sources. That's why the Ruins of Dantooine stuff is there&mdash;it's before he wins Cloud City and after the Galaxy of Fear stuff, as Ruins of Dantooine is set 1.5 ABY. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:12, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) ***A shame, but that seems right. --Eyrezer 23:48, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) * An appropriate mention of Tocneppil and Dash somewhere in the early sections should be added, based on that quote at the start of "Revenge attempts." Also a mention of Moabab would be good.
 * 25) **I'm not a big fan of saying "Calrissian met X" ten paragraphs before they actually have significant encounters with him, but I recognize that that opinion is not universally held. I've mentioned Tocneppil, Dash, and Mungo Baobab farther up, in a general sort of way since the timeline is unknown. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:09, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) ***Yeah, I can understand that. I mainly requested it because Tocneppil was not otherwise mentioned in the bio.
 * 27) * Can you explain why EV-9D9 was a suspect at that early point? Do we know that the Idiot's Array story is not after EV's attempt?
 * 28) **I have no explanation, so I've moved EV-9D9's story to before Idiot's Array. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:54, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Great. I hoped that might be possible, but I wasn't sure. --Eyrezer 22:51, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) * "Furthermore, he stated that he intended to keep things running smoothly at Calrissian, using a modus operandi he described as the Lando System." Is this meant to be running smoothly at Bespin?
 * 31) **Reworded. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:24, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) * The Fact Files sources list needs to be expanded, and the reference notes likewise made more specific. (per this CT).
 * 33) **Cav has promised me FF goodness, will update as soon as I have my hands on them. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:24, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) ***Fact Files are now in the source list, and the references have been updated accordingly. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:12, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) * I suspect that "the death of scientist Lem on Cloud City" is the same as "when a noted scientist, Doctor Issan Len was murdered." These should be combined.
 * 36) **I was hoping someone would say that. It only appears as Lem in the Fact File, but I left in just because one could look at it through a hyperinclusionist point of view and say that they're different incidents. Removed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:09, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) ***I added a redirect
 * 38) *The image of Boba Fett in the Precursor section is out of place. Is there no appropriate image from Crisis on Cloud City?
 * 39) **Working on it, but the images from Crisis are junk in quality. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:54, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) * "Just as they rocketed off the station," in the Destruction fo the Tarkin section. Were they in space suits or another ship? Could you clarify?
 * 41) **Clarified, with thanks to QuiGonJinn for the info. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:07, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) * A few of the WEG sources actually link to a disambig for first and second editions. Could you link to the actual ones, and add in the second editions, etc... unless we have policy otherwise.
 * 43) **I checked them, added in second editions for the two Galaxy Guides. I checked the others, but didn't see anything else at a first glance. Did you have other corrections in mind? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:02, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) * I'm fairly certain Lando will be in a number of video game guidebooks. (On a quick look at the source list, I couldn't see any.) These likely include the guides from Demolition, Jedi Outcast, and others...
 * 45) **I've taken care of this one myself.
 * 46) ***I've also tweaked the article with some small tidbits of information. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:56, 23 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) ****Great. --Eyrezer 23:03, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 48) *Lando is in Star Wars: Rebellion (video game), and so also likely Rebellion: Prima's Official Strategy Guide. The game needs to be checked. --Eyrezer 08:27, 22 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 49) *The Return to Cloud City section: "Spotting a chance to divert Lobot's attention from himself to the Imperials..." I don;t understand how this is meant to work. How will attacking the trooper's divert Lobot's attention? Secondly, there is only one short paragraph on Star Wars 83: Sweetheart Contract. This should be expanded to the level of detail of the other Marvel comics. --Eyrezer 11:10, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 50) * In the first paragraph of the Black Sun section, it would be good just to add a little half-line regarding Luke. The previous section ends with him left behind, and I know that he has some other adventures/complications. While they don't need to be described, it should mention that Luke has rejoined the Rebels or something.
 * 51) **Sure. Done. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:33, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 52) * Can you explain why Benedict Vidkun attacked them?
 * 53) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:33, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 54) *I added this pic, but you may prefer this one instead. --Eyrezer 10:57, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 55) *In the Star Wars Technical Journal (Volume One), page 17, it is mentioned that Lando added the quad lasers to the MF. I haven't read down to the ships section yet, but this should be added if not already. --Eyrezer 11:46, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 56) Toprawa:
 * 57) *I realize I promised you the ESB RD script notes, but until that time, here's the objection for their missing info.
 * 58) *Also, you're missing info from the ROTJ radio drama/script.
 * 59) **Can you be a little more specific about which parts? I gave it a listen when Hydro made his initial ESB objection, and while I don't have the script, I did add info from the radio drama. Was there something in particular you were looking for? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:32, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 60) ***Sure. I'm in the process of listening to it now for my article purposes, so I might add to this, but two things that strike me as pertinent are the scene in which he first approaches Leia in Jabba's palace to reveal himself, meaning that not everyone in the Save Han group knew how he had gotten in and where he was; and secondly the scene in which they first leave Tatooine, they're forced escape past an Imperial blockade. Lando just sits in the Falcon ' s cockpit and doesn't do anything but talk, but a mention would be appropriate, I feel. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:35, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 61) ***While en route to the Rebel fleet from Tatooine, Lando and the group help sooth Threepio's hurt feelings about not being privy to the specifics of the rescue Han plan. They talk about Corellian Overdrive, and Lando goes on to fix Threepio's damaged photoreceptor. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:46, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 62) ***There's actually a lot more to that scene. Han and Lando talk about how the Falcon was in Lando's possession during Han's carbonite days, etc. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:07, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 63) ****ROTJ radio drama has been located, listened to, and the article updated appropriately. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:54, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 64) *Including "TCG: Return of the Jedi" and "The Empire Strikes Back (TCG)" in the Source list just isn't good enough, I'm afraid. Moreover, I see only a single CCG card in that entire Source list, which tells me you haven't really scoured these cards for new information. You'd be surprised to find some new tidbits here and there. I realize there are probably dozens upon dozens of cards with Lando info on them, but if you're going to include one, you need to include them all. Yes, I know it sucks, and it's hard work, but this is an FA. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:20, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 65) **"if you're going to include one, you need to include them all." Does this mean I just get away with removing that one? :-P ^_^ (lol, jk). No, in all seriousness, you're absolutely right. I've done all the CCG cards, and I'll let you know when I get the radio stuff and TCG ones added in. I'm going to be kind of busy until the end of the week due to RL though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:40, 24 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 66) ***5 and a half dozen TCG and CCG cards added to source list? Is that better? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:01, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 67) QuiGon
 * 68) * No info from The Gambler's Quest.
 * 69) **I've added a short paragraph myself based on what was written in the plot summary for this comic. I think it's sufficient. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 15:57, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 70) * Some things are missing in the appearances list. Mighty Chronicles adaptations, Star Wars The Empire Strikes Back Mobile, Super Star Wars series, etc. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 17:54, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 71) **Took care of it myself per Ataru's request. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 16:43, 8 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 72) * More missing info from N.R.I. Reports. Small tidbits about Lando requesting aid from the Senate. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 19:30, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 73) **Added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:58, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 74) * Are you sure that the "Black Sun coup" section should go between the Marvel stories? It would make much more sense to place it after the Nagai-Tof war. All Marvel stories are linked to each other pretty tight and there is no gap in the plot for SotE: Evolution to take place. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 20:53, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 75) **After some research, I've seen no reason to leave the layout as is, and the Black Sun coup is now placed after the Marvel sections. Seems to make more sense that way. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:56, 23 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 76) * "The Mindharp of Sharu" section. Context on Jabba.
 * 77) * Also, context needed on Darth Vader and Luke upon first mentions in the "Trap at Cloud City"" section.
 * 78) * Explain what was so important in Luke that Vader set a trap for him.
 * 79) * Same section."Especially after the disappearance of C-3PO" Provide some context on what really happened to him. Then mention somewhere in this section that 3PO was recovered, because as it is now, it left me under the impression that the droid was still missing when Lando and the others left Bespin.
 * 80) * Same section again. "in pursuit of the Millennium Falcon and its Rebel crew". Mention that it was Han who has joined the Rebels, because it can be interpreted as if some unknown Rebels have acquired the ship.
 * 81) * Mention that Lando flirted with Leia and/or add it to the relationships.
 * 82) **All of QuiGon's objections up through this have been fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:08, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 83) *The "Skywalker's affliction" section. Context on Domina Tagge.
 * 84) *Same section. "which Darth Vader had falsely accused Luke of being responsible for". Rephrase. Yes, Vader did falsely accuse Luke the first time, but then Skywalker killed Tagge for real in issue 37, even if he did it by accident.
 * 85) *"Finding Argo and Vanis" section. Last sentence: "but were apparently unable to find anything." Unsourced.
 * 86) *Same section. Context on the second Death Star.
 * 87) *Linking problems. Jabba is linked in both "The Mindharp of Sharu" and "Mission to Blimph 3" sections, while the second Death Star is not linked at all upon the first mention in "Finding Argo and Vanis", but is instead linked in "The Battle of Endor"; and the link is that of the Death Star in general instead of Death Star II. Check other links.
 * 88) *"Near-death experience on Godo". Context on Bey.
 * 89) *Mention that Lumiya changed sides and allied herself with Tofs. And that she was shot on Saijo.
 * 90) * Stay tuned. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 21:01, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 91) * "Nomad City". Context on Ecclessis Figg, ysalamiri. Also, why Thrawn needed the ysalamiri?
 * 92) * "Karrde hid the two former generals" Next sentence:"As such, the two former generals". Repetitive, rephrase.
 * 93) * "Karrde knew that was where Skywalker, who had escaped from his custody, and his pursuer, a woman named Mara Jade, would flee to, and that the Empire would find them and realize that Karrde had not turned over Skywalker to them." Maybe it's just me, but this sentence seems weird.
 * 94) **I've finally understood what this sentence says and I think I had some difficulty with it because of the missing "that". I've added it myself.
 * 95) * "After trekking through kilometers of forest, fending off predators, the party received when some Noghri commandos". Received what?
 * 96) **Everything from "Nomad City" down to here has been fixed. Although, Figg was already contextified. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:08, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 97) ***I'm sorry, but I haven't seen any context. You didn't say who Figg was. I've added it myself, just to show you what I wanted in the first place. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 11:45, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 98) ****I figured that saying that Figg was the one who first built Cloud City was sufficient context, but I have no problems with your change. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:56, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 99) *"Palpatine reborn": "Unbeknownst to Calrissian, Skywalker had fallen to the dark side of the Force, and was in fact commanding the Imperial fleet". Mention that prior to that, he gave the codes to Artoo.
 * 100) *Same section. Mention that Skywalker was redeemed after all.
 * 101) * "Run-in with the Imperial Remnant" Context on Reelo Baruk.
 * 102) * After the events of Jedi Outcast that happened in 12 ABY you mention the events of Planet of Twilight as happening the same year, yet the latter is placed here on Wook in 13 ABY. I don't know if it is really a mistake, because I haven't read the book.
 * 103) * "Tag and Bink". Context on Tag.
 * 104) **Last three fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:52, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 105) *I guess that's all. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 11:57, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 106) *One more thing. Is there nothing to add from Ord Vaxal: Prison Planet of the Empire? QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 14:19, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not a formal objection, but there's space for a lot more quotes in the article. Yrfeloran 04:13, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Who portrayed Lando in Dark Forces: Soldier for the Empire audio drama? Mauser 13:48, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm voting for it!!!!!!!!
 * Will give a full Outcast update as soon as I can. I'll busy through the weekend and Monday, though, but next week, I hope to get that and some more of the sourcebooks done. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:06, 26 March 2009 (UTC)

Missile Boat

 * Nominated by: MIS Tau 1 22:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I've merged/deleted/restored this article similar to it's FA status

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Looks to be back where it was. Thefourdotelipsis 04:52, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Back to where it was when it was first reviewed. Cull Tremayne 10:16, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:41, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:42, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 00:13, 8 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Approved, but should not be queued pending GT's objection.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:03, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A paragraph in History is unsourced. Also, wasn't Thrawn an admiral when the missile boat was developed? If so, you should refer to him as "Admiral Thrawn" in the intro.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:53, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Both fixed. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 22:03, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 4) * The infobox isn't fully sourced.
 * 5) **Fixed. All from TIE Fighter, either gameplay or the tech room.
 * 6) * Fourth paragraph of history isn't sourced.
 * 7) **Fixed earlier. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:24, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * "The abundance of missiles led to the development of previously unorthodox tactics, much to the chagrin of Imperial commanders, as advanced missiles were relatively expensive." Can you check that? I don't recall the game mentioning Imperial commanders having issues with its use.
 * 9) **Couldn't find it either. Removed. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:45, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * "It was at this time that Thrawn revealed his new starfighter, the Missile Boat, to the Emperor." This too. Can't find a specific reference of when he first informed Palpy about it.
 * 11) **Rejiggered. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:37, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * The hull's RU rating could be mentioned under shields and armor.
 * 13) **Added. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:45, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Despite all efforts by Missile Boat pilots, the Empire was forced to evacuate the research platforms." V1 & V2 should probably be split into two articles, both of which should be linked in here.
 * 15) **Split. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:45, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * "Missile Boats were responsible on more than one occasion for protecting convoys carrying other Missile Boats from Zaarin's raiders." Only one that I can find since the other was a decoy.
 * 17) **Also rejiggered. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:37, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * According to the game, Zaarin's destruction of the few Missile Boat manufacturing facilities also contributed to their withdrawal from service.
 * 19) **Also also rejiggered. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:54, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) * Maarek Stele should probably be mentioned a little earlier than he is, since he was involved in most of this. A little context for him might be useful too.
 * 21) **Rearranged. You'd think the TIE Fighter story was all about him or something. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:37, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) * The BTS could be expanded a little. For example, the usual stuff about its first appearance and that it was limited to multiplayer in XWA.
 * 23) **Done. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:54, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) *There's no mention of the training missions. If not a training section, then they should at least be mentioned under history as they appear to be simulations of some of the ship's early uses. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:43, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Image:Mis2zn2.gif needs work, and I don't think Image:MissileBoat-TFDOTEOSS.jpg is actually a book cover. I'm assuming simply fair use? —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:09, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Image:MissileBoat-TFDOTEOSS.jpg is from the back cover of the guide it's sourced to. Bookcover is used on that kind of excerpted image all over the place. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:28, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) *Also, since Image:Mis2zn2.gif was intended to highlight the DOS version of the game, which tops out at 256 colors, the only work it needed was to be converted from the deprecated GIF format, which is now done. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:56, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **DOS? Wow. I haven't used that in a while. Thanks Culator. —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:41, 3 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Brianna

 * Nominated by: 01:42, 28 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: As recommended, trying for FA after GA success.

(0 Inqs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 06:52, 31 January 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Preliminaries for that promised review:
 * 2) * A fair lot of the sections need to be further divided up. "Playing as a male Exile" in particular is one of the most exhaustively long sections I've ever seen.
 * 3) **Hopefully accomplished.
 * 4) ***"Early life" and "Travels with the Exile" should probably have subsections. Graestan ( Talk ) 15:58, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * "Travels with the Exile" deserves a quote, preferably something about the Exile from Brianna's own dialog.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * The "Masters" field of the infobox could be filled out a little more expansively and creatively.
 * 9) **Done
 * 10) ***Remember to list chronologically. Graestan ( Talk ) 15:58, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * Image:Lasthandmaiden.jpg is a pretty terrible image and could use a recapture.
 * 12) * Another image could probably be snagged to be fit into the BtS section; while something appropriate to the subject matter is preferable, general Brianna pictures shouldn't be any trouble, either.
 * 13) * Linking really needs to be gone over. Have pipelinking in mind (the missions, for example). Also, in particular I noticed some glaring omissions in the links for the BtS.
 * 14) **I believe this has been handled.
 * 15) * Graestan ( Talk ) 05:14, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 17) * Please check the Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia for information.
 * 18) **According to Doluk, who has the CSWE, this is the entirety of Brianna's article, and the info has already been incorporated in the article: "An Echani Handmaiden who served the Jedi Knight Atris almost 4,000 years before the Battle of Yavin. She was the daughter of politician Yusanis and Jedi Master Arren Kae, veterans of the Mandalorian Wars. Brianna was born with evidence of her parents' infidelity and bore the stigma of this indiscretion. Brianna stole the freighter Ebon Hawk from Telos IV."
 * 19) ***At least put it in the source list. Why not source something to it, also, for good measure? Graestan ( Talk ) 03:03, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Done.
 * 21) * Please arrange the source list by publication date.
 * 22) **Check.
 * 23) * Reference tags number three and six appear to be identical. Please merge them.
 * 24) **Check.
 * 25) * "Brianna was the daughter of a forbidden love affair" – Agreement issues. Please rephrase. Also, "affair" is used a bit repetitively.
 * 26) **Check.
 * 27) * Please explain Kae's exile. How? From what?
 * 28) **Check.
 * 29) * The tense gets all wonky after this. Lose all the "woulds" and get back to normal, narrative past tense.
 * 30) **Check.
 * 31) * Mandalorian Wars needs context.
 * 32) **Done.
 * 33) * "the responsibilities of his other five daughters and Brianna" – Somewhat vague. Please be more explicit.
 * 34) **Done.
 * 35) * "The two" sounds odd after you speak of three people in the previous sentence.
 * 36) **Done.
 * 37) * The Echani probably need some context. When you speak of Revan destabilizing them, it sounds odd, as they are presented simply, as if only a species, before this.
 * 38) **Done.
 * 39) * Revan needs to be set up as the DLotS before referring to him offhand as such.
 * 40) **Done.
 * 41) * "brought under service to" – Please clean up the syntax.
 * 42) **Done.
 * 43) ***I fixed the new "were entered the service of." Graestan ( Talk ) 03:03, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) * "Masters of the Jedi Civil War" – This is somewhat confusing. Please be more specific.
 * 45) **Done.
 * 46) * Mentioning Brianna's ignorance of her own Force sensitivity during her time with Atris would be helpful.
 * 47) **Done.
 * 48) * Okay, was Yusanis married when he had the fling with Kae? You don't mention it, but go on to talk about his infidelity later.
 * 49) **Check.
 * 50) * I'm going to stop right here. I haven't even looked at the intro. Please take everything I've said here, and go back through the article vigorously, applying all the sorts of things I've pointed out. I'll resume the review once the previous objections have been rectified. Graestan ( Talk ) 04:18, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 51) Graestan's Unlimited Mercilessness: I wasn't kidding about the statement in the last round. I tried to keep going through, and came up with like five context and other content-related objections in a couple of sentences. Please, please go through the rest of the article; the types of things I'm going to object to are the ones I already have.  Graestan ( Talk ) 03:15, 21 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 52) Cylka:
 * 53) * More context is needed regarding her parents Yusanis and Arren Kae. Avoid mentioning Kreia this early because it will be somewhat difficult to give her context at this point.
 * 54) * More context is needed on Atris when she is introduced. Who was she, why was she there, and so on.
 * 55) * Same for the Telosian Jedi Academy when it is first introduced. You need to add in why it was built, what was stored there, etc.
 * 56) * More context on the destruction of Peragus and how the Exile and the Ebon Hawk were involved. Also explain why the ship was impounded and the companions detained by TSF.
 * 57) * More context on who the Exile when she is first introduced.
 * 58) * A bit of context as to how they tracked the Hawk to the hidden Academy and make sure to mention all of the companions.
 * 59) * The Exile agreed to Kreia's request so as to avoid a conflict - this needs more context. It is a bit arbitrary as it stands now. Cylka  -talk- 23:26, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 60) **Have dealt with the objections up to here so far.
 * 61) * Brianna and the Exile have a long conversation with each other in the Academy. This should be explained in greater detail.
 * 62) **Addressed.
 * 63) * More context is needed on the mission to find the Jedi Masters. Why were they on that mission in the first place and why was it important.
 * 64) **Also addressed.
 * 65) * A bit more information is needed on Atris's fall to the dark side.
 * 66) **Done.
 * 67) * Some more context is needed to the final battle at Malachor V. Cylka  -talk- 10:20, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 68) **Also done.
 * 69) * The paragraphs in the P&A are a bit short. Either try flesh them out a bit, or maybe combine them.
 * 70) **Done.
 * 71) * In the first part of the Bts, the paragraphs are too short. Combining them would probably be a good idea.
 * 72) **Done.
 * 73) * The playing as a male exile section is too long and much of the information is redundant. Instead of repeating the same information that is in the body, maybe just a paragraph or two explaining the differences will suffice. A lot of the information in this section can be integrated into the main body since we know that Brianna traveling with the Exile is canon. It seems to me that only the romance needs to stay in the Bts.
 * 74) **Addressed.
 * 75) * The romance with a male Exile needs to be expanded a bit more. You should include her jealous interactions with Visas Marr.
 * 76) **Done.
 * 77) * Brianna also had a Handmaiden's staff. You should try to fit that in somewhere.
 * 78) **Done.
 * 79) *The article is well on it's way. It just has a bit too little information in some areas, and a bit too much redundancy in others. But it's looking good! Cylka  -talk- 20:08, 6 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Remove nomination (Inquisitorius vote only)
 * 1) I'm calling this one derailed.  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:42, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I'm back after an admittedly lengthy absence and started working on the article again yesterday. Just letting you know! 22:11, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

Denal

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 17:28, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first-ever FA nom.

(2 Inqs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 08:22, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) CC7567  [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 00:29, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 16:51, 1 April 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) * "Skywalker then ordered to trigger the explosives..." Who?
 * 3) **I don't quite understand. It's pretty much elaborated on who Skywalker is.
 * 4) ***Who did Skywalker order to trigger the explosives?
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * In the BtS, you say that the rank of commander is probably game mechanics, yet he is listed as a commander in the in-universe P&T section. This is a little confusing.
 * 7) **This "commander" in the P&T doesn't mean "rank", but rather "a person who commands". I can change it to something else if it is still confusing.
 * 8) ***I understand where you're coming from, but it's still a little confusing. I think it could use a rewording.
 * 9) ****Reworded a bit. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 18:24, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Overlinking: Several articles, including clone trooper, 501st Legion, and Anakin Skywalker, among others, are linked more than once.
 * 11) **An article should be linked once in the infobox, once in the intro and once in the main body. So they are. I've only found a couple of overlinked articles, but they don't include those listed above.
 * 12) ***Okay, my mistake. I'll strike.
 * 13) *I did a copyedit for you. Next time, you should probably have someone do a copyedit for you before the nom; a second set of eyes can catch things that the person that wrote the article misses. I'm always willing to copyedit articles; just let me know on my talk page. Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 07:26, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thanks. I'll ask you next time. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 10:03, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Tommy:
 * 16) * You go back & forth between Confederacy & Seperatists; please choose one.
 * 17) **Aren't they the same? I mean it's like using "the Empire" and the "Imperials" or the "Rebel Alliance" and the "Rebels" in the same article. It reduces the amount of repititions of the same word. I've seen such occurences in many articles, even FAs.
 * 18) ***In that case, I concede. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 02:13, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * Who dispatched Denal to Tatooine?
 * 20) **Addressed.
 * 21) * "After clearing the base from the hostiles, Denal grew even more suspicious, as he was informed about the droid presence in the desert." When you say from the hostiles, do you mean that he destroyed them?
 * 22) **Yes, I do mean it.
 * 23) * Same sentence. Who informed Denal of the droid presence in the desert?
 * 24) **Addressed.
 * 25) * "His suspicions finally proved true when the Republic discovered a hidden Confederacy research station."I imagine that the hidden research station is the droid presence that Denal suspected, but it reads like the Republic found it for him. Where was it hidden? Was he not a part of whatever division of the Republic found that found it? Also, it reads like the station is empty.
 * 26) **Hopefully addressed. Yes, the Republic found it for him. And no, he wasn't a part of the division that found it.
 * 27) * " After downloading the secret plans hidden there, Denal barely escaped the installation." How could he barely escape if he previously cleared the place of all hostiles?
 * 28) **There were two bases. The one that he cleared and the one that he escaped from.
 * 29) ***So then, the second one is full of droids? Why did they barely escape? You need to specify a little more as to why they barely escaped.
 * 30) ****Provided some context.
 * 31) * You start this section saying that Denal was dispatched. Later you start talking about the Republic, and "they". Up until that point it reads like Denal went to Tatooine alone.
 * 32) **Addressed, I think.
 * 33) * "Once inside, Denal's troops encountered a Jedi, who joined them in a quest to free Skywalker's Padawan." Who's the mystery Jedi? If there is a name, it needs to stated & linked.
 * 34) **There is no name. It may be Obi-Wan though, because first you receive a message from him and then see that hooded guy. However, he is called just "Jedi" in the dialogue. I'm going to replay the game to confirm. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 12:49, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) ***If we can't figure out who he is, then something in the BtS needs to talk about that.
 * 36) ****Added some tidbits in the Bts.
 * 37) * Stay tuned. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 22:50, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) * "&hellip;what seems to be the standard blue-colored lieutenant variant of the Phase I armor." Can this statement in the BtS be sourced?
 * 39) **I think the screenshot from the game in the biography section illustrates this.
 * 40) ***So source the statement with a reftag from where the screenshot appears.
 * 41) ****Done. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 15:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) * "His rapid advancement in rank during the game, however, must be reward mechanics and are not representing canonical promotions." What's up with this?
 * 43) **I need a name has put the fact tag there. Honestly, I don't know how to source it. It is just a logical conclusion based on the previous sentence. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 23:05, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) ***I reworded it, and removed the tag, because IMO it's good now. You may want to get a second opinion on this.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:29, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) ****It looks better now. Unfortunately, I need a name seems not satisfied with that. I'll guess I'll have to discuss it with him. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 13:23, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 46) *****Well it needs to be fixed somehow before I strike. You may want to contact INAN and see exactly what he wants, since his sourcetag is holding this up. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 14:23, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) *I really enjoyed this. Be careful however of beginning sentences with "but", but otherwise good work. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 22:06, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 48) Eyrezer
 * 49) *An interesting choice for an article. I was previously unaware of the mobile game. First of all, I have added redlinks for a number of the battles/missions that need articles. My naming is perhaps not the best, so feel free to rename those articles, but they need to be added.
 * 50) *"Denal wore a custom helmet, most likely of his own design". Is the part about design mentioned anyway or just presumed on general practice? If the later, I think it should be removed.
 * 51) * The source template for the Pocket Model is not working properly - the link should not be displayed. I am not sure if that is a problem of how you implemented it, or with the template itself.
 * 52) **Fixed it. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 11:13, 25 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 53) *How do we know that the Clone Wars episode comes after the game?
 * 54) **Well, when I wrote the article, I based it on the following: at the start of the game, Denal takes charge of the battalion, meaning that prior to that, he was a simple trooper, yet in the episode he has some kind of rank. However, after all that talk surrounding his rank, I'm not sure of such placement. On the other hand, should I base it on the release date, then the episode will come first (November 17), followed by the game (announced on November 19, don't know when it was released, though.). What would you suggest? QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 19:59, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 55) ***I'll look into it. --Eyrezer 07:47, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 56) *Can we get a more official link for the bobblehead thing? Is it on RebelScum.com? --Eyrezer 22:05, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 57) **After some googling, I've found a link to Starwars.yahoo.com, an Amazon link, a link to Collectorsgalleryonline.com and a link to Rebelscum.com (although the latter is a sponsor announcement from the Collectors Gallery). Which one is more official and which one should I use? QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 12:32, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Only slightly less cooler than Rex. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 17:28, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Is there not an article for the unnamed superweapon in the cell phone game? Cull Tremayne 08:22, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Not yet, but I'll make it soon. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 13:30, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Article created and linked to. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 15:41, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * I've heard rumors that Denal appears in TCW movie. I'm investigating it now. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 14:06, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Found some troopers that looked like Denal from the cell phone version, but then again, it is never stated that one of them was Denal. QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 23:05, 7 March 2009 (UTC)

Form VII: Juyo / Vaapad

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:54, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Form VII, the Way of the BAMF, was more than a fighting style for BAMFs like Samuel L. Jackson; it was a state of mind&hellip;(read the article to see the rest.)

(3 Inqs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Great work, guys.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 15:58, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Well written, approved after source run-through. DC 21:59, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:45, 22 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:15, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) --Eyrezer 03:30, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From a non-BAMF
 * 2) * You should explain Form VII's retcon in TPM and AOTC in the BtS.
 * 3) **Done. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page )
 * 4) * Isn't there a non canon template for a non-canon story in the appearances section?
 * 5) **So there is. Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * Did Darth Maul use Juyo in any of his other appearances in Canon?
 * 7) **Fightsaber is thus far the only source to mention Juyo directly with regards to Maul. Shadow Hunter gives him a lot of Teras Kasi moves, but no Juyo mentions. Most mentions of forms are either in RPG sources or via dialogue/narration. Maul's POV, except for Shadow Hunter, is rarely shown, and he's not exactly the conversationalist of the century. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * In Description, you should use info from the ROTS novel, which gives a pretty extensive explanation on how Vaapad works. That is, if that info from the novel isn't restated in the sources you give in that section.
 * 9) **Considering that Stover also wrote Shatterpoint, he uses a lot of the terminology as he does in the ROTS novel. Also, the Fact File and EGTTF used almost verbatim some of his wording. I've given it a small buff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Are you sure you can't expand the Description of Juyo? It seems short.
 * 11) **Small detail buff given from EGTTF and Fightsaber. I'm really squeezing here, though. A lot of times, Form VII is referred to generically, so a lot of the material in the general section applies to that as well. I'd be waxing redundant if I were to repeat much of the same information. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * "Form VII had fewer practitioners than other styles, due to its difficulty, complexity, and demands.[2]" Expand upon this, or merge it into a section, a single sentence section just doesn't work.
 * 13) **Popped it into the Juyo section. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * Was Juyo/Vaapad used in the NJO after the Galactic Civil War? If not, mention that nobody used the form anymore or what it evolved into.
 * 15) **Completely unknown. Tionne had records of the form, due to EGTTF, but unlike Ataru, which we know had at least one practitioner in the Legacy era, nobody is explicitly stated to use Form VII. The latest confirmed IU practitioner would be Vader, I suppose. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * Go through Windu's sources and see in which ones he dueled in, so you can expand the Appearances section, which I feel is missing stuff.
 * 17) **I respectfully disagree. If the source doesn't say Vaapad, Juyo, seventh form, or form seven, I'm not adding it. I had to purge the list of a bunch of "Well, Mace uses his saber in it, so it must be Vaapad"-style appearances, and I'm not about to re-add them, especially after all that checking. No source has ever stated if Mace exclusively used Vaapad&mdash;in fact, Drallig says in EGTTF that Form VII users have to master all the other forms. Moreover, no source says when he picked up Juyo/developed Vaapad. It'd be original research to add anything else in&mdash;I checked a bunch of the Republic comics and some other sources previously, but if you don't have anything specific in mind, I just don't think there's anything else, given all the work Grunny and myself did. It's not in any of the other Republic comics, it's not in Emissaries to Malastare, and it's impossible for it to be in Stark Hyperspace War or the Yinchorri Uprising&mdash;the forms weren't invented then OOU. I even checked a couple of Mace's Tales comics&mdash;nothing. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) ***I completely understand Ataru, objection struck.
 * 19) *It's really well-written, I'm just concerned about missing sources, and I just want to make sure you use all info, and not miss anything. DC 19:41, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) **I appreciate the compliment. However, I'd like to draw a distinction between all info, and all unique info. A lot of the sources are very repetitive *cough EGTTF cough*, and so while the source list is huge, most of them are fairly minor or repetitive in terms of actual content. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***Okay, that makes more sense then. DC 21:59, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) Can you apply Template:Blog to reference 26, and Template:Cite web to refs 28 and 29? 29 should probably separated into a different reference for each site. -LtNOWIS 20:23, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) *Applied templates and separated references.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 01:51, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) **Looks good. -LtNOWIS 08:47, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 26) * First paragraph of description could do with a brief introduction to the fact that there's two variations before you get into describing them.
 * 27) * "The form's appeared to be unconnected, its motions seemingly unpolished to an untrained observer." Form's what? Missing word? Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:07, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) **Both fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:52, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) Eyrezer:
 * 30) * Could you add a line or so as to who Roan Lands was?
 * 31) **Added.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 07:12, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) * Throughout the article, I think it would benefit from some dates. It frequently shifts from old Old Republic to the final years of the Old Republic, and if you didn't already know who the people were it would be difficult to track. One example would be to provide a date for the NSW.
 * 33) **Buffed, I think. Let me know if you want some more. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:45, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) * Also, there are three images of Windu using the form; are there any of Billaba?
 * 35) **Added one.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 07:12, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) * You should mention in the main body that juyo was another name for vaapad as discussed in the Bts comment on Insider 92.
 * 37) **Mentioned.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 07:12, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) * Why the doubt about Juyo/Vaapad in Galaxies? Seems canonical to me.
 * 39) **Well, my assertion is that based on all I've seen, the forms are open to player-built Jedi characters in the game, but I'm unsure as to whether they also apply to NPCs, which would make them definitively canon. Having not played Galaxies, I'm relying on secondary sources here, but I'll ask around. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:45, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) ***I'm not too sure about this one, but Galaxies is Galaxies :p --Eyrezer 03:30, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 41) *As an aside... you should probably add the infobox to your two other lightsaber form FAs. --Eyrezer 07:23, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) The last sentence of the intro needs work. It's reads like two completely unrelated sentences that have been combined pointlessly. Overall, the article feels very repetitive, but that's not an objection per se. —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:12, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) *I second the repetitive comment... --Eyrezer 04:55, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) **Separated the sentence into two, tried to cut down on some of the repetitiveness. The issue is that there are two subtopics here, and so each has to be described&hellip;and the fact that authors tend to use the same phrases for either Juyo, Vaapad, and/or the form in general does not help. Let me know if there's more you'd like done in that regard. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:39, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * A shout out to Grunny, who did a lot of the work in putting together this article and was incredibly diligent and helpful in this co-project. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:33, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Any chance of creating and utilizing a lightsaber form template? Founder, date of founding, characteristics, notable users, that kind of thing, could go into it. It'd look much cleaner with a template. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:28, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * I've had a go at creating one here. What do you think? :-)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 00:57, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay, I've created the template and added it to the article, what do you think of it? :-)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 08:01, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

Squib

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 23:21, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Deep delving of multibig source pages has deliminated once-were-there problems of nottishness of littlenumbers and tiny words at bottom page. Once more, please reread again and leave here helpy words for raising Squibbish intelligence level throughout the world.

(3 Inqs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Excellent article. It is very helpful and has everything I would ever need to know about Squibs. Togrutalover 20:40, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Ahem:
 * "Its Distincted Farlstendoironess is at the shame timesh grandified and privileged by presenting a vote to this ultra-super-hyper-beyond-over-topnotch nomination, je dirais même plus, this koovy nomination. Something is glad to have reached an agreed voting deal that could satisfy all of the involved parts, and some not involved parts, but nonetheless, and nevertheless, and evertheless, it is regretful that a inquisitoriousnessless ballot is not nor cannot be decisive in this case concretion, whatever all that might or will sit or stand for. You bet!"
 * &mdash;Skippyfarlstendoiré (Skippy? Squibby?)src
 * --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:13, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 07:49, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 20:44, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:06, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) A couple of very minor things I would normally fix myself :S There is a template for Star Wars, which you should format those references too, and re punctuation, it should go inside "quotation marks," rather than outside them "on the Wookieepedia." --Eyrezer 08:45, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Thanks for the comments. Not that I'm doubting you, but this is different from Wikipedia policy, which is to use "smart quoting"; if the punctuation is part of the original quotation, put it inside, but otherwise put it outside. Just so I can make sure I've read all of Wookieepedia's own style stuff, where is the Wookieepedia American-style quoting convention listed? ~ SavageBob 22:12, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *I've done the blog thing. Will get to the quotes soon. ~ SavageBob 12:55, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * OK, the quotes are fixed now too. ~ SavageBob 22:10, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) **Re punctuation style - I don't think there is a CT on it :p I've just always done it this way because we have opted for American spelling, and so presumed American punctuation too... --Eyrezer 14:12, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa:
 * 3) * Source list needs to be in correct OOU publication date order. Prepare to order every source list you ever create like this, because I'm going to object to it every time. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:45, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Oops; I thought I did... Can you tell me one that you think is out of place? Also, I'm not sure how to handle the Databank entries, since they have no "first posted" date. ~ SavageBob 22:12, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Scratch that. They were all frakked up, but they should be fixed now. There are a few where I can't find the month of release, though, so I hope that's OK. ~ SavageBob 12:55, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Greetings, person. Farlstendoiro would like to pinpoint some specifics on your article so we can deal about the best way to reach an agreement. And then you can get one uservote.
 * 7) * Despite a minor hiccup after the rise of the Empire over the salvage of orbital wrecks,[68] What hiccup? I want to know more about this. Isn't the OS more specific?
 * 8) * Squibs freely mingled with species across the galaxy. So, the official policy of Wookieepedia about the "identity parades" of Ultimate Alien Anthology is that?: "At one moment in history, there was one Sluissi to the right of one Snivvian to the right of one Spiner to the right of one Squib"
 * 9) * Perhaps the most successful Squib scoundrels were Emala, Grees, and Sligh. Unless some in-universe source specifies that they were, it seems non-neutral point of view to me.
 * 10) * One of his players portrayed a Squib character named Smileredon-Verdont in a campaign Not exactly: Orrin Marko's character was named Smileredon-Verdonté while his canon version lacks the final -é because of W.E.G. failed to recognize the letter &mdash; so the RPG character and the canon character do not share name, and are thus different people, one of them not being canon. Similarly, another of the characters in Hidalgo's Rookies, Raleigh "Kestrel" Dawn, had a different nickname before entering the canon.
 * 11) * The Windu controversy. The BtS paragraph could use some information about the source Hidalgo used to name his Squib in 1993; now the text suggests that Winduarté's name was coincidentially re-used in The Phantom Menace.
 * 12) * Can I utter that your article is the kooviest thing I ever saw to this side of accented-lettered-name-ness? Gratitudexpresioness to person until a great extent. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:13, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **I'll address your points in order:
 * 14) ***Unfortunately, the original source says little more than this. It's a headline in a HoloNet News article, but there's no associated article.
 * 15) ***I don't think there is any official policy except that images that appear in canon sources are considered canon. It's a good image of a Squib, but there's unfortunately no way to extricate it from behind the other aliens. And, besides, if staged promo shots like this are considered canon, then why not these UAA pics?
 * 16) ***I guess I don't find it POV. I'll think about this one for a bit.
 * 17) **** "Perhaps the most succesful [whatever]" is what I find POV'ish. If I say "Darth Rivan was perhaps the most powerful Lord of the Sith" in an article, that would be polemic. However, if WotC's Whatsover and the Whatsover Worlds includes the sentence "Rivan, maybe the strongest Sith Lord ever", then it would be canon.
 * 18) ***Well, Hidalgo seems to consider them the same character, so I was trying to save on words by not splitting hairs over the missing é. But I can add something if you think it makes the article better (my opinion is that it belongs in the character's article, not here).
 * 19) **** I'd rather see the é. Seriously, I always thought é was important to understand Squibs: It's in Macemillian's name and was in Smiley's, not only in one individual &mdash; as such, I think Hidalgo intended to establish a pattern. It's a letter that appears only in certain planets (also including Naboo, but precedent was set with Squibs). It's more a Latin than a Saxon letter, and Hidalgo has a Latin name (I don't know where he was born). I admit, its pronunciation varies greatly depending on the real-life language, and we cannot be sure about its Squib pronunciation, but if it were simply "e", then it wouldn't be accented.
 * 20) ***OK, I can add the Whills stuff.
 * 21) ***Gratitudally I accept and welcome your applause-words into my tufted sound-hearing earskins! ~ SavageBob 22:10, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Update for Skippy: I've addressed your remaining three objections. Please have another look. It's nice to have someone so knowledgeable of the subject review the piece. It helps keep out the errors! Let me know what you think. ~ SavageBob 00:19, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) Eyrezer:
 * 24) * There is a small mention of Squibs in Operation:Elrood, page 18. --Eyrezer 07:43, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) **Which, I should add, you already have :p
 * 26) * As a preliminary point, there is a bit of image congestion in the Squibs in the galaxy section. --Eyrezer 11:57, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) **Fixed. I took out the Emala/Grees/Sligh image. The artist seems to have just copied the Galaxy Guide 4 Squib three times, and the fur/eye colors don't match those in the stories in which those charactes appear. ~ SavageBob 13:41, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) ***The left/right alternation also needs a little tweek from the Institutions section on. --Eyrezer 22:00, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) ****I tweaked it a little. I know that, in theory, images should go right, left, right, left, etc., but from a layout standpoint, it's always a good idea to have images that are obviously oriented in one direction or another placed in such a way as to lead the reader's eye into the page, not away from it. That's why the portrait of Ebareebaveebeedee is currently bucking the left-right trend. The king's gaze leads the reader's eye inward, and helps the cohesion of the page. ~ SavageBob 22:04, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) *****Works for me. --Eyrezer 00:10, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) * "This led to a common Squib greeting: rubbing a person's palm across the cheek fur. As Squibs often wore gloves, this conveyed more information than a simple handshake." I don't understand how the gloves affects the handshake. Wouldn't rubbing across the cheek convey more information than even a handshake without gloves?
 * 32) **If you shake hands, and you can taste with your fur, you can taste with your hands. If you (or the other person) wears gloves, though, all you taste is glove. Does that make sense? ~ SavageBob 12:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) * The one other thing I would say is that I think there should be a mention of the colonizing efforts in the history section, perhaps even more so than in the Squibs in the galaxy section. Other than that, it's good to go! --Eyrezer 02:48, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **I've made a mention of it. How's that? ~ SavageBob 12:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) ***Struck. Although since you pointed out that it wasn't actually a colonising effort as such, my objection is less valid. You can remove the line from the history if you so wish. --Eyrezer 20:44, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) Chack Attack:
 * 37) * In the Bio, you mention something about the NJO era. That's OOU, so choose another term.
 * 38) **I've reworded it a bit. I'm not sure how else to refer to that era. Our New Jedi Order article seems to treat it as an in-universe term. ~ SavageBob 12:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) ***After discussion with a few users on IRC, it seems that it is an OOU term. I'll try to get some more opinion, but if you could, please try to change it, and I'll just let you know if NJO era turns out to be IU.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:23, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) ****Perhaps, "an idea that persisted well into the period of the Yuuzhan Vong War"? --Eyrezer 03:43, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 41) *****Is it "New Jedi Order," "New Jedi Order era," or both that are OOU? If the former is IU, the article should be good to go. If both are OOU, I'll change it to what Eyrezer suggests. ~ SavageBob 04:32, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) * Also, context on Kwilper.
 * 43) **There isn't much, but I've added a few more words. ~ SavageBob 12:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 44) *Got a bit more to read, but nice work so far.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:26, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 45) **I believe that I have addressed your concerns. Let me know if there's anything else. ~ SavageBob 12:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 46) Jinzler
 * 47) * Squeerie, for example, led a team on Almas c. 30 BBY and helped a group of Bail Organa's agents find the lost Jedi Master Kirlocca -The player characters in the Dawn of Defiance campaign are agents of Bail Organa, but not in the Living Force campaign, which this refers to, so I'm guessing that you've been a bit confused by them. I believe that for this particular assignment, the agents were working for Lanius Qel-Bertuk, so you could change it to that. Also, Squeerie doesn't actually help them to find Kirlocca and the other missing Jedi --Jinzler 22:46, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 48) **Thanks for the correction; I've fixed the name of the person they're working for (the modules are difficult to follow sometimes). But I disagree about Squeerie's help; he sells them or trades them important information and/or items, so that's help in my opinion. ~ SavageBob 12:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 49) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 50) *Reign of Ebareebaveebeedee: "Their intelligence revealed that the Ugors had obtained a gravity well projector with which they were bringing order to their junk-filled home, the Paradise system." Ordering the junk? Or is this something else? Explain, please.
 * 51) *Squibs in the galaxy: Indomitable links to a disambig page. Fix it to the correct one.
 * 52) *Add A Guide to the Star Wars Universe to sources and specify which edition(s). I know it's in the 2nd, but can't check the 3rd. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:18, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

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Nym

 * Nominated by: Acky and Ataru 21:56, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Now playing at FANs everywhere: Pirates of the Corellian Trade Spine Meet Davey Jones. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:56, 9 February 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Jinzler
 * 2) *You could perhaps add something on Nym's Factory Compound and how IG-88 occupied it
 * 3) *There is no mention of Nym's Anniversary Bash --Jinzler 23:45, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Could you flick the images to alternate sides from the top? Also, is there an appropriate image for the Tackling Sol Sixxa section? --Eyrezer 14:08, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *Flicked. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:31, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Few things:
 * 7) *The Outfoxed section reads a bit awkwardly. The wording throughout the whole thing could be improved, and it seems to be a little too PBP. Ask if you need more specifics.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:58, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * In the section about the Rodians: "All three of them were given suits of ceremonial armor, though they were sized to fit Rodians; Nym's was too small, and the Feeorin pirate felt ridiculous as the legions of Rodians prepared to do battle with each other." This seems unnecessary to me; I'd suggest removing the whole thing.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:32, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **The inclusion seems fine to me... --Eyrezer 10:51, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) ***Hmm. The info about him feeling ridiculous seems notable, I suppose.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:11, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * Could we get a quote for P&T?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:26, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **Got one in there now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:58, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) Infobox item unsourced. DC 01:44, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *Whoops, fixed. Meant to ref that before I FAN'd it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:42, 19 February 2009 (UTC)

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Mission to Monastery

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn Be mindful of the Living Force...[[Image:Quigonheadshot.jpg|16px]] 10:14, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Freshly GAed.

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 * 1) Company Commander:
 * 2) *Intro should be broken in two paragraphs at least.
 * 3) *Is there no article for the duel between Skywalker & Vader?
 * 4) *If this is a mission, how come you're not using the mission infobox?
 * 5) *"Meanwhile, Skywalker met Vader and was forced to accept a duel with him. However, Organa had unwittingly brought Domina's brother and former baron of the House of Tagge, Orman Tagge to Monastery, whom Vader used to test Luke's mastery of the Force. Skywalker killed Orman, who was disguised as Vader&hellip;" Did he duel Vader or Tagge, or Tagge disguised as Vader only, or both?
 * 6) *The "Background" section needs to be broken up into at least two paragraphs.
 * 7) *You mentioned several times about Skywalkers suspicion of Vader clouding Domina's mind. Is this not a mind trick?
 * 8) *Is the "Skirmish in the Crystal Valley" part of the mission? If so, it needs to be made into a subsection, & the paragraphs under "mission" need to be in their own subsection also.
 * 9) *No aftermath section?
 * 10) *I really liked this. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 12:29, 3 April 2009 (UTC)

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Darth Kruhl

 * Nominated by: —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 18:23, 13 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: 'Cause I would never be that Kruhl to you&hellip;oh no, no, oh no&mdash;don't be Kruhl.

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 * 1)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 21:28, 13 February 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Harrar will be Kruhl to be kind&hellip;
 * 2) *"displayed" his blaster pistol (in the intro) reads like Fel showed Kruhl the weapon and allowed him to review it etc. Can we use another verb here?
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) *When you say that Kruhl "cut Rikkar-du down", it gets confusing when the Codru-ji seems to remain alive for a few more clauses. Clarify the process of Rikkar-du's defeat and change the verb.
 * 5) **Good catch. Addressed.
 * 6) *More context needed on Roan Fel and the Empire-in-exile in the second section; compared to the info in the intro its somewhat lacking.
 * 7) **Actually, I felt as though what was there was enough, but I did add a tad bit more. Please check it out, & see if it suffices. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 01:02, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *Any info on how Kruhl gains entry to the Pellaeon gardens? Or how Fel detects Kruhl's presence? Please Contextify/clarify if possible.
 * 9) **Unfortunately, there is none. The next time we see Kruhl upon his arrival on Bastion, he's got his lightsaber raised to strike Fel down.
 * 10) *Nice stuff. -- Harrar 23:05, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Appreciate the review, Harrar. Please advise if anything further is required.
 * 12) I believe that it was Vikar Dorn's son who captained the Dauntless, not Dorn himself. Could you check this and amend if necessary? - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:50, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *Hey, Cav. You are correct with Dorn's son being the captain of Dauntless, but it was Dorn himself that was assigned to assist Kruhl. For the mission, the senior Dorn commanded the Dauntless. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 01:02, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Mirta Gev

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 03:00, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: None.

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 * 1) * I think you should expand the "Second Battle of Fondor" section. At the moment, it has no mention of her fight with Tahiri Veila during it, or that Jacen Solo Force choked her, so that Tahiri could escape --Jinzler 21:35, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 02:30, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) DC
 * 4) * I think you should state the actual year of Sinta's carbonation instead of how long ago it was.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Why didn't Marec and Vel's relationship last?
 * 7) **It doesn't say.
 * 8) ***True indeed. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 22:15, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * The entire Early Life section is very choppy and doesn't flow well at all.
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) ***It looks good now. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 22:15, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * "Gev got into her mother and grandfather's business as a bounty hunter, at one point encountering former clone trooper Skirata during an ill-fated mission." You're beginning to go somewhere in this sentence, but it needs more detail, mostly about her encounter with Skirata. Expand upon this sentence.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * The beginning of Finding Fett is very choppy as well.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) ***Looks good. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 22:15, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *You don't mention a thing about Gev wanting revenge while she traveled with fett, nor her attack on him. This is in Bloodlines by the way.
 * 18) **Addressed.
 * 19) ***Could still use some work. It is understood that she probably wanted revenge because her mother wanted revenge, but you need to explicitly state that. You also mention her attacking Fett, but you do not say why; you just say she did it. Expand on that as well. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 16:52, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ****Addressed.
 * 21) *Why was stopping Fett's aging important?
 * 22) **Addressed.
 * 23) * "But first, the pair traveled to Geonosis, to return the body of Fett's father, Jango Fett, to Mandalore to be buried."
 * 24) * Can't start a sentence with But.
 * 25) **Addressed.
 * 26) * Context for the Yuuzhan Vong War, and how it affected Mandalore.
 * 27) **Addressed.
 * 28) * "The hostility from the bartender led to an all out brawl, with the Mandalorians winning easily." Easily is POV, unless Fett or Gev said it was easy.
 * 29) **Addressed.
 * 30) * "After the fight, the bartender told Gev and Fett that Cherit's successor, Fraig, took over Cherit's position, and that Fraig could be found at the Tekshar Falls Casino." Redundant, delete and rewrite.
 * 31) **Addressed.
 * 32) * Expand upon their confrontation with Skirata.
 * 33) **Addressed.
 * 34) * Mention that Venku was Kad'ika.
 * 35) **Addressed.
 * 36) * Did Mirta really call Orade her boyfriend?
 * 37) **Addressed.
 * 38) *Expand upon what Mirta did during Sinta's treatment, and how Solo came to them during this time.
 * 39) **Addressed.
 * 40) ***It could stand a tad more. Didn't Mirta give Sintas the Heart of Fire around that time? —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 04:00, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 41) ****Addressed.
 * 42) * Per Jinzler on the expansion needed for the Second Battle of Fondor.
 * 43) **Addressed.
 * 44) *"This time it was a battle to protect the Verpine, an insectoid race who built the Tra'kads from the Imperial Remnant." I'm pretty sure that the Verpine allied with the Mandalorians for other reasons. Expand upon that.
 * 45) **Addressed.
 * 46) ***Not really. The Mandalorians didn't control the Verpine, they were business partners. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 04:00, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 47) ****Addressed.
 * 48) *Also, mention that the Mandolorians and the Jedi could not afford to lose the Verpine to Caedus and the Imperial Remnant, and the reason why they had to defend them.
 * 49) **Addressed.
 * 50) ***Not yet. This will be probably be addressed when you fix the one above. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 16:52, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 51) ****Yup, addressed.
 * 52) * Expand upon what exactly happened at Roche; like what Mirta and Solo did, and how the battle went.
 * 53) **Addressed.
 * 54) * Mention Fett's reaction to Mirta's capture, and what this meant.
 * 55) **Addressed.
 * 56) * Expand upon what happened when Mirta was resuced from the Anakin Solo by Solo, and how the war ended.
 * 57) **Addressed.
 * 58) * "but her subsequent whereabouts are unknown, due to the nanovirus preventing her return to Mandalore." Delete, we don't use unknown results.
 * 59) **Addressed.
 * 60) * "But once Gev finally met Fett, she was initially hostile, but eventually became friends with her grandfather." Not only do you use but twice in a setnence, but you start if off with it. Rewrite.
 * 61) **Addressed.
 * 62) * Why did Gev become firends with Fett?
 * 63) **Addressed.
 * 64) * You mention nothing about her friendship with Solo, nor her hatred of Jedi in the P&T.
 * 65) **Addressed.
 * 66) *You also mention nothing about her lust for revenge against Solo for killing her mother in the P&T, or the Bio.
 * 67) **Addressed.
 * 68) * P&T needs an expansion in general.
 * 69) **Addressed.
 * 70) * You don't use any info from the CSWE, besides when you mention the picture in the BtS.
 * 71) **Couldn't find much that wasn't in the article, but nevertheless found something. Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 04:09, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 72) *You might be missing some things in the Sources section, make sure that Mirta isn't/is mentioned in any sourcebooks or Star Wars Insider issues.
 * 73) **Couldn't find any, but still looking. Hoo. Thanks for the (mind-blowingly harsh) review. :)  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 04:09, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 74) ***Yeah, couldn't find any other sources.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 23:57, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 75) *This is missing a lot of info, and has a lot of short, confusing, choppy sentences. Make sure you contextify everything, watch your linking, and try to avoid colloquial language. DC 02:24, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 76) Tommy:
 * 77) *". After the skirmish, Boba Fett, who thought that his granddaughter had been killed, became enraged at Jaina Solo and Jedi Master Luke Skywalker, blaming them for Gev's death, meaning that the aloof Fett truly did care for his granddaughter." This needs to be broken up and slightly reworded.
 * 78) **Addressed.
 * 79) *"Gev attacked Solo viciously both times they encountered each other in the battles of Roche and Fondor," How did she go from being Solo's friend to attacking her viciously?
 * 80) **Addressed.
 * 81) *Wasn't Mirta a special type of Mandalorian warrior?
 * 82) **No, I don't believe so.
 * 83) *You need to state sooner in the intro Mirta's homeworld.
 * 84) **Addressed.
 * 85) *More coming. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 05:16, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 86) *You don't mention the Heart of Fire anywhere, actually.
 * 87) **Addressed.
 * 88) *The second and third sentences in the "Search for Skirata" section start with "The two".
 * 89) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:02, 3 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * I volunteer to take over DC's objections in light of his departure. In take over, I mean to merely verify that the objections have been addressed in accordance with the objection. An Inquisitor's review will be given as well, and, of course, only one vote will be cast. Please advise on the next course of action. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 05:29, 28 February 2009 (UTC)

Bek-Vulkar gang war

 * Nominated by: Cylka  <font color=#00A693>-talk- 21:57, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yes, it is another KotOR nomination.

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 * 1) In good faith that our arrangement will be carried out.  Graestan ( Talk ) 03:56, 20 February 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Just one thing from Fiolli:
 * 2) *Maybe we can talk about this on IRC if there is a problem, but I think that there might need to be a section or subsection the on Republic officials (namely, Revan, Onasi, and Shan) who became entangled in the war. This could be a subsection under Hidden Beks, or another section with Participants. Your choice. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 14:56, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Taryn Clancy

 * Nominated by:  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 01:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: One of Vilardi's Vixens. I'd let her handle my package any day.

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 * 1) That's two you owe me, Junior.  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:27, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:17, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) DC 22:23, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:04, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Heh&hellip; &hellip; heh&hellip;. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:15, 19 March 2009 (UTC)

Object SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is the truth ) 10:57, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) A bit of context on Garm Bel Iblis' role in the battle (ie. Commander of defense forces or whatever).
 * 1) *I added it to the intro. The body section kind of already says it.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 11:28, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) DC
 * 3) * Why did Kal finally allow Taryn to accompany him, and why didn't he let her join him in the first place?
 * 4) **The source doesn't say.
 * 5) ***Bah.
 * 6) * Could you mention that the Requital was Imperial before you talk about the Inspection team?
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * You give no context foe Del Sato when you introduce him, leaving me to wonder who the heck he is. DC 19:58, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Contextified.
 * 10) * Any chance you could combine the paragraphs in the Bio? A bunch of short paragraphs doesn't look that great.
 * 11) **I fixed a couple spots where the separation wasn't necessary; as for the others, I kind of tried to follow the "contour" of the story, which involves a fair amount of jumping ahead temporally.
 * 12) ***It looks a lot better, and I understand about where you didn't combine the paragraphs.
 * 13) *Be aware of context, you're missing it in some places, but otherwise great job. DC 19:54, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) You should mention in the Bts that the story was also published on Hyperspace. You could also crop the picture from the title page and add that in if you were so inclined. Otherwise, very neat. You should write more! --Eyrezer 06:39, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Cav's AJ loving eye:
 * 16) *I feel that the political situation on Coruscant should be clarified - you mention the "former Imperial Palace" without noting why this is. You also do not tell us what is now operating out of the palace.
 * 17) *Mention should be made of Voldt searching the cargo hold, and Bremen & Sato setting up the fake boxes to explain why Voldt believed their lie about not setting down on Coruscant, and to give a little background when the homing beacon is discovered - namely that the Imperials were in the cargo hold with the boxes where the beacon was found. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 01:26, 4 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * When handling similar, one-source AJ story articles, such as Detien Kaileel, I sourced the RPG bio info separately to the story; imo, it can't be considered part of the story since it's not present in the reprint. I'd suggest you do the same here. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:15, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Excellent point. I'll get to that sometime today. Just let me make sure we agree that calling "Taryn Clancy" (the RPG stats sidebar) a separate article would be dumb.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 13:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Yeah. I'd just ref it to the AJ issue itself. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:04, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * OK, I think she's fully sourced now.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 19:56, 21 February 2009 (UTC)

Darth Nihl

 * Nominated by: DC 02:49, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The first in line for a project of mine that will see all major characters from Legacy be FA'd. This is just the beginning, beware.

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 * 1) After a copyedit.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:48, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) I believe that in his succession boxes, you should mention what he is a Fist and Hand of; for example, "Fist of One Sith" would be one. –<font color="#c00">Victor  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|15px]] ( talk page ) 05:43, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I agree. Addressed, and thanks for the review, Victor. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 01:36, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * I volunteer to take over this nom, in light of DC's departure. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 06:22, 27 February 2009 (UTC)

XoXaan

 * Nominated by: —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 11:18, 25 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments:Twicebaked.

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 * 1) Hi Tommy. Nice article just a few things.
 * 2) *"the error of their ways" seems POV - I'm guessing this is what the Jedi wished them to do?
 * 3) **Addressed, how's that?
 * 4) *Can we quantify, though perhaps not exactly, the amount of years that passed between XoXaan's death and Hett's arrival? I.e, over 4,000 or just under 13,000 etc.
 * 5) *Is there a link to Hett's "shattering" of the door - a certain Force power?
 * Ah, the Yuuzhan Vong. I know this is straying from relevance but when you say he was captured by the "extragalactic" Yuuzhan Vong it is ambiguous whether or not he left the galaxy himself. Can you mention the fact that they were scouting the Unknown Regions or something? See what you think.
 * 1) **Addressed.
 * 2) *"Merely anyone" in the P&T seems tautological in its context. Can we reword?
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) *"Lesser beings" can probably be reworded to sound less POV, I imagine :P
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) *That's all. Interesting stoof. -- Harrar 22:45, 5 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * Just over 1k. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 11:18, 25 February 2009 (UTC)

Toki "Corellian Strangler" Tollivar

 * Nominated by: —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 20:54, 25 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: Ladies and gentlebeings, I give you&hellip;the Corellian Strangler! Wanted dead or alive, bounties distributed after confirmation of successful capture or cessation of life. Spoiler warning.

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:55, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:47, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) The intro says he worked in the Republic Ministry of Commerce during the Great Sith War but the biography suggests he worked there after the war. Clarify, please. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:54, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed. Thanks for the review, GT. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 22:18, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * My first-ever KoTOR-exclusive nom. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 20:54, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * There was a small discussion over on the GAN page about how to handle the news sources in the KOTOR comics. Like HNN reports, they should be in appearances. There was, maybe, possibly, consensus building for treating them like so:
 * "The Adjudicator Special Report: The Outer Rim" – Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic 14: Days of Fear, Part 2
 * This way treats them analogous to an article in a larger source. --Eyrezer 23:50, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Addressed. Thanks, Eyr. —Tommy [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 00:10, 26 February 2009 (UTC)

Celeste Morne
"M'lady, it's time. Shall we?" "We shall."
 * Nominated by:A joint production by —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) and <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 16px"><font color=#008080>Cylka  <span style="font-family: times, cursive; font-size: 13px"><font color=#00A693>-talk- 21:53, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

- Tommy and Cylka, solidifying their partnership

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Quanto

 * Nominated by: —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 04:11, 27 February 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: In conjunction with the TOTJ resurgence movement.

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Treis Sinde

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 11:26, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: GA, upgrading to FA with the completed release of the "Fight Another Day" story arc. Legacy comic spoilers.

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:31, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 15:18, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Vul Isen

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:13, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Per above nom's comments. Read one Legacy nom, get one free. Spoilers, etc.

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 * SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 07:03, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 15:11, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Spelunker probe droid

 * Nominated by: SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 01:53, 7 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first attempt at an FA. All objections welcome.

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 * 1) --Eyrezer 02:00, 8 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) CC7567  [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 00:29, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Pranay Sobusk  ~  Talk  16:07, 23 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Pranay
 * 2) * Could you rename the "Spelunker probe droid" section? The title is a bit expressionless in my opinion and says nothing about the content of the section. Maybe something like "creation" could describe this better.
 * 3) **How's manufacture?
 * 4) * Your sixth reference says "Star Wars: Clone Wars director commentary". Can this be a bit more specific? Is this commentary on any DVD or available in the  Web so that it's easier to verifiable? Also, is it known which director made that statement?
 * 5) **Clone Wars Volume One. I'm not aware of it being on the internet however. And the entire thing is spoken by the one director.
 * 6) * The descriptions of the quotes currently just say "Yoda" and "Dooku" which is not really explaining. Please describe a bit more when they used the quote and in which situation.
 * 7) **Expanded a bit.
 * 8) *Great work otherwise.  Pranay Sobusk  ~  Talk  16:06, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thanks for the review. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 10:55, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * Yes kids, Soresu now writes GA's and FA's. Watch out, KotOR, you're next in the firing line. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 01:53, 7 March 2009 (UTC)


 * Cav has previously raised some issues about whether this article should be split into Spelunker probe droid and chameleon droid, on the basis that they were completely overhauled for a different purpose. I think he may have convinced me. Thoughts? (I really don't mind either way, since I could probably still make chameleon droid an FA and then GA Spelunker :-) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 23:19, 7 March 2009 (UTC)

Ru Murleen

 * Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:04, 8 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: No, not that one.

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 * 1) Thoughts from Fiolli:
 * 2) *"Her skill and daring helped her to move through the ranks&hellip;" 'Daring' what?
 * 3) *"Anchorhead Base would be unable to hold off the Imperial forces for long&hellip;" Tense appears to be in the present-conditional. Not sure how you would want to fix this.
 * 4) *Over all, I love it. Just those two minor things. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 14:45, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Alien Exodus

 * Nominated by: &mdash;Silly Dan (talk)
 * Nomination comments: Was going to start with GA, but changed my mind. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 16:12, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) I really can't imagine why Lucas never published the book, it sounds amazing from the way you told it. It's a real shame, you know. Good article by the way :-) Kilson Likes PIE, and Alien Exodus 19:27, 17 March 09 (UTC)
 * Thanks! (As for why it never got published, I speculated in an earlier version that Ace Books wasn't allowed to use Star Wars characters and situations because Bantam Spectra still had the rights.  Either way, without it being a Star Wars story, it appears Sawyer lost interest in the project, so it never got beyond the sample.) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 00:55, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) I can't really think of anything else to add. --Eyrezer 12:19, 19 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * We don't seem to have a layout guide for real-world articles on publications, but I've attempted to follow the layout of existing GAs and FAs. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 16:12, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

Heol Girdun

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 01:04, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I hate CSWE.

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 * 1) Grunny:
 * 2) *Intro: The Second Galactic Civil War needs a little context with regards to participants, which will also explain why Corellian terrorists would attack Coruscant.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) *Counter-terrorist work: At the start of the second paragraph "Guard" is used alot, try to mix it up.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) *"However, before Girdun could get to work, Skywalker identified Gev's target as Solo's father Han Solo due to surveillance images on Vel's datapad, eliminating the need for Girdun to interrogate the other Corellians." This is the first and only mention of Mirta Gev, and its not clear who she is.
 * 7) **Addressed. It was an absent-minded mistake, and Gev doesn't have anything to do with the article.
 * 8) *"The conversation was a cease-fire negotiation between Corellia and the Alliance, but Gejjen wanted Solo and Galactic Alliance Defense Force Admiral Cha Niathal removed from office. Girdun, knowing that Gejjen now had to be stopped, quickly reported this conversation to Solo." Why he now knew Gejjen needed to be stopped when he was having cease fire talks could be explained better.
 * 9) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:11, 3 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:45, 1 April 2009 (UTC)

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Gudb

 * Nominated by: —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 21:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Enter Gudb: the Jedi Killer.

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Mar Tuuk

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:18, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I assure you, this nomination is perfectly legal.

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 * 1) Good job! -- CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 23:24, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Now, viceroy, we shall discuss a new treaty.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:47, 14 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Great job; very well written. Lucius malfoy7 20:20, 16 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) I agree. Dr.Kermit ( The Doctor is in ) 20:52, 25 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Nice job, Tranner. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:08, 25 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:34, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 2) * Context for Wat Tambor in the intro, please.
 * 3) * There needs to be setup for the Defender before referring to it.
 * 4) * Graestan ( Talk ) 20:34, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Both handled, if Tranner doesn't mind. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:44, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Thanks, Tope. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:25, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Lone battle droid

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:06, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Hopefully interesting. Has a companion GAN which is also worth a read.

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:30, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Lord Hydronium 06:59, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:14, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 14:33, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 14:49, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) You need to alter your quote formatting in "Desertion". Otherwise, geat work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:28, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *To a quote template, you mean? Generally, I would use in such situations, but I thought for here because they were both unnamed it would be more clear this way. Afaik, the quote template usage only applies to two line quotes; for longer quotes, it can be either/or. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:34, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 4) *Calling him a B1 battle droid twice in such close succession in the intro is a bit of a no-no, in my opinion.
 * 5) *I don't see how the Creator and Manufacturer fields in the infobox are not synonymous in this case. I could see it for something like C-3PO, but not this droid, and not when Baktoid was a Confederate droid factory.
 * 6) *The first sentence in the bio is Ciceronian in its length. Please break it up for readers of less linguistic faculty than you or I possess.
 * 7) *"disarmed &hellip; taking off half the B1's arm" is a bit awkward, the figurative version followed by the literal one, leaving the reader to question which was meant.
 * 8) *More images.
 * 9) * Graestan ( Talk ) 15:15, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * More images incoming. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:06, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Wow, I remember creating this article way back in the day. Amazed you got this thing to 1000 words.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:28, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:34, 15 March 2009 (UTC)

Battle of Ryloth (Clone Wars)

 * Nominated by: Dark Lord Trayus and CC7567  [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 05:18, 15 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Both of our first nominations for FA. Wish us luck!

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 * 1) Looks good Kilson Likes PIE 17:36, 21 March 09 (UTC)

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 * Seriously? Still nothing? haha Dark Lord Trayus 08:56, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Any civilian casualties? We have a |civilian= field if so... --Eyrezer 09:09, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * The only civilian casualties i can remember from the show are the village bombings. Were there any others? Dark Lord Trayus 19:00, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * I don't think there were any others. &mdash; CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 20:30, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Yo'gand's Core

 * Nominated by: -- Harrar 14:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You left him. You left Chewie! Okay so I thought for my return I'd give y'all something a little different. Setting a mighty precedent for FAs on tactics, here we have Yo'gand's Core, the tactic that got R.A. Salvatore death threats. -- Harrar 14:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:33, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Great read. Lord Hydronium 06:30, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 14:36, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Welcome back:
 * 2) * Just one thing. You have intro exclusive information (that bit about the age of the space station the Vong pulled down). You mention it predating the tactic by 10,000 years in the intro, but not in the body.
 * 3) **I removed it, a) because planets predated the tactic by a lot longer! and b) I don't have the NEGTV&V or the NEGTD (which is where the 15,000 years estimate for the Cremlevian War apparently comes from) and c) it's kind of showy and irrelevant. Cheers for the review :p! -- Harrar 01:21, 20 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *That's all I got. Great work, pal.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:36, 19 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * Okay so. First off, no infobox. I think the article needs one but I'm no Grunny and don't know how to pull one out of thin air! If a tactics infobox could be created, I have some ideas if you want to post on my talkpage.
 * If we did have an infobox, I think the image should be the one of Dobido on fire falling to the surface, from the comic, with Nom Anor and the speech bubble cropped out. It's already being used in the article as you can see. Any takers for the crop?
 * I'm looking to expand the BtS with more info, but I figured I'd put up what I have at the moment as it's satisfactory
 * One more thing&mdash;I went with Purpose, Features and History. If people have different suggestions, I'm all ears. -- Harrar 14:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)

Lok Durd

 * Nominated by: Kilson Likes PIE 15:34, 17 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:If you add a big white beard, a big red suit, and substituted presents for the giant defoliator missiles, you got a regular Neimoidian Santa. Kilson Likes PIE 15:34, 17 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Per pre-nom review. -- CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 20:04, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Per changes addressed in review below; I'm amazed by the article's length for a single appearance.  &mdash;Lucius malfoy7  [[Image:Nute777.png|20px]] ( Give it up for Lil' 'Soka Tano, ladies and gents! )  20:21, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Lucius's Look
 * 2) * Could you get a better opening quote? Great for the bio, but as an article header, not so much.
 * 3) **Expanded the quote; even though Tee Watt Kaa has dialogue in it, I took it out, since it doesn't matter that much. -- CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 23:36, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * After landing on the planet and creating a small base camp, Lok tested the defoliator on a pair of droids, which turned out to be successful. The bolded is a little redundant, and the base wasn't that small.
 * 5) **Addressed. -- CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 23:36, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * However, he was interrupted by three Jedi, Anakin Skywalker, his Togruta apprentice Ahsoka Tano, and Aayla Secura, who had crash landed on the planet prior to Lok's arrival. It should be: three Jedi : Anakin Skywalker, his Togruta apprentice...
 * 7) **Addressed Kilson
 * 8) ***Changed to: However, he was interrupted by Jedi Knight Anakin Skywalker, his Togruta apprentice Ahsoka Tano, and Twi'lek Jedi Knight Aayla Secura, who had crash landed on the planet prior to Lok's arrival. -- CC7567  [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 23:36, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * Sometime during the Clone Wars, Lok developed a defoliator weapon, an enhanced radiation weapon that could destroy all living matter while leaving inorganic material unharmed: his own combat troops, the battle droids. It should be: leaving inorganic material unharmed, such as his own combat troops, the battle droids.
 * 10) **Addressed Kilson
 * 11) * The Jedi and the clones were able to reach the colony before Lok and his forces, and told Watt Kaa about the defoliator and that Durd was planning to test it on them. It should be Tee Watt Kaa, as it is the first time you're mentioning him in the section. I would also split the rest of the sentence.
 * 12) **Addressed Kilson
 * 13) * Although his character is captured at the end of the episode, it appears that based on interviews with George Takei, Durd will be a recurring villain in the series. This is speculation.
 * 14) **It's speculation, yes, but it has evidence to an official source. The source gives evidence, and it's not speculation made by ourselves. I'm not sure if there's a policy on that, but I'm leaving it in for now. (The direct quote from the interview: "The final result is a truly memorable new addition to the SWCW universe. One that, even though he won’t say exactly when, appears to be a recurring character for the series.") -- CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] talk 23:36, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ***I missed that part in the interview... Sorry!  &mdash;Lucius malfoy7  [[Image:Nute777.png|20px]] ( Give it up for Lil' 'Soka Tano, ladies and gents! ) 17:56, 29 March 2009 (UTC) 20:21, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Otherwise, great job. A surprisingly long article for one appearance, and lots of great supporting quotes and images.  &mdash;Lucius malfoy7  [[Image:Nute777.png|20px]] ( Give it up for Lil' 'Soka Tano, ladies and gents! ) 17:56, 29 March 2009 (UTC)

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Yun

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 18:20, 20 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "He is a Jedi. He deserves a FAN."

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 * 1) *I think that the article is featured article material. <font face="Arial"> ZEM  talk to me!   05:44, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

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 * Find out who voiced him in the radio dramas. Mauser 11:00, 22 March 2009 (UTC)
 * According to Dark Forces: The Collector's Trilogy audio drama, Timothy Kuhlmann. --Craven 16:30, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Wow, thanks Craven. I was looking in the web and couldn't find any info. QuiGonJinn There's always a bigger fish. 17:14, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

X-83 TwinTail starfighter

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 05:44, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Graduating from GA thanks to the Legacy Era Campaign Guide.

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Comments There is a shortage of quotes, but not a total lack. There's one from Legacy 34 you could use: "Storms almost tore the Mynock apart. That TwinTail of yours will shred."
 * An appalling lack of quotes in existence. - Lord Hydronium 05:44, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Also, 1,040 words at the time of this comment. - Lord Hydronium 05:45, 24 March 2009 (UTC)

- Cade Skywalker on the comparative durability of the X-83 TwinTail and the Helot-class medium space transport

Not much, but at least there's one. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 19:49, 29 March 2009 (UTC)

Saba Sebatyne

 * Nominated by:User:Markrox91
 * Nomination comments:I've worked hard on this article for some time now, and I believe it is worthy of a FAN.

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 * 1) Kilson Likes PIE 15:26, 27 March 09 (UTC)

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 * 1) This is a relatively recently failed GAN and the issues holding it up that time still haven't been dealt with. It's far too short and undetailed, and is missing info. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:30, 26 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) You still need to update the article to the events in Outcast. Kilson Likes PIE 18:25, 26 March 09 (UTC)

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Remove nomination (Inquisitorius vote only)
 * 1) Per Acky above. We're not here to completely rewrite an article for anyone.  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:04, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:08, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) "It ain't personal, it's business." Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:13, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

Jerjerrod

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 20:23, 26 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Been working on this for a long time.

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 * 1) Toprawa and Ralltiir is not as forgiving as I am:
 * 2) *Change the pronunciation to real IPA characters. What's there looks just plain ridiculous.
 * 3) *Can we get a main image where the top of his hat isn't cropped off and his mouth isn't open? You can see the spittle between his lips.
 * 4) **Culator took care of it.
 * 5) *A character of this caliber deserves some external links.
 * 6) **I think there were some originally, but two of them linked to non-existent pages on StarWars.com, and another was to a fan site of some sort.
 * 7) ***I've added the two StarWars.com links back, though they still don't work. I don't know if there are any other relevant external links. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:35, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *The image caption punctuation needs to be gone over more closely; punctuate only in cases of a complete thought.
 * 9) **Should be good now.
 * 10) *It's not even stated in that first sentence of the intro that Jerjerrod worked for the Empire.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) *His initial job for the Empire belongs in the intro.
 * 13) **Done.
 * 14) *His birth on Tinnel IV, if any source explicitly states that, needs to be in the intro and body. If not, then it needs to be removed from the "Homeworld" field of the infobox.
 * 15) **Removed from infobox.
 * 16) *Pick whether you're going to call the Executor a Star Dreadnought or a Super Star Destroyer, and only use one version. Otherwise, people who haven't read Saxton's baloney will be confused as to whether there are more than one ship being referred to.
 * 17) **Done.
 * 18) *The transition of "officially" to "unofficially" is a bit blatant. Can something more smooth be found, that states more explicitly that the official reason was nonsense and the unofficial one was the actual one?
 * 19) **Done.
 * 20) *That there was a shield set up to protect the Death Star and where it was generated from should be established where the bunker is first mentioned.
 * 21) **Done.
 * 22) *Gurdun needs some context&mdash;his name out of nowhere means little.
 * 23) **Done.
 * 24) *Endicott, too.
 * 25) **Done.
 * 26) *Skywalker's captivity must be set up before it is referred to.
 * 27) **Done.
 * 28) *All that introspective stuff really belongs more in the P&T than the bio. Actions belong more in the bio, thoughts more in the P&T. Please slim it down.
 * 29) **Moved almost a whole paragraph to the P&T. Let me know how it looks.
 * 30) *There really needs to be a Legacy section about what happened due to the Death Star's destruction&mdash;and, in terms of Jerjerrod not carrying out his orders, what didn't happen.
 * 31) **Done.
 * 32) *Jerjerrod's attitude about hurrying should be moved further back into the P&T to read less repetitively with the quote that it stems from.
 * 33) **Done.
 * 34) *The second alternate version in the BtS is written pretty stiffly. Please increase the flow. Also, the setup of that particular story leaves me hanging; where in the movie does it take place, I find myself asking. Be more specific about where the changes would occur.
 * 35) *Two of those redlinks have to be single-source. Can they be eliminated by the man who did all the research to write this article?
 * 36) **Done.
 * 37) *I think perhaps the image of Jerjerrod being freaked out at the mention of the Emperor should move to the P&T, and the image of Vader choking him should be moved further into the BtS, to balance things out a bit towards the top of the bio.
 * 38) **Done.
 * 39) * Graestan ( Talk ) 14:45, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) **I'll take care of the rest sometime later today. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 15:41, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Mist (bounty hunter)

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 20:13, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: DarkStryder nom I've been sitting on for a while.

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 * 1) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 2) *Not an actual objection, but is there any specific reason you capitalized the "S" in both stormtrooper and spacetrooper? I've always seen them lowercased, but I was wondering if it was different in the relevant sources.
 * 3) *According to this image, Mist's helmet is based off of concept art for Boba Fett's helmet. This needs to be mentioned in the BTS.
 * 4) *Interesting article. Well done. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 14:47, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * Did we ever decide whether masked or unmasked pictures were better for the infobox? Precedent appears to go both ways, but the unmasked image here is pretty unobscured. -LtNOWIS 09:11, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * I thought about it, but my reasoning is that, bar that one picture she is always referred to, and depicted as, Mist. In fact, her real name is not even revealed until the last book of the series. It just seemed to me to not accurately represent who she is in relation to the role she plays in the series. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 18:41, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

Oojoh

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 11:14, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: An Atrivis/KOTOR crossover

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 * 1) Very clean.  Graestan ( Talk ) 16:50, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice article. -  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:18, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Good job. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 15:56, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * <S> Infobox image needs to be re-cropped (black line at the top). </S>--Mauser
 * I'm hoping to get a higher res scan anyway, so that will hopefully be dealt with then. --Eyrezer 11:27, 4 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * At one point I had treated the final short para of the P&T as a P&A, but given its small size, I think it looks better combined... --Eyrezer 11:14, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Wouldn't that image be better for the infobox? Mauser 07:50, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, that image is from Raana Tey's nightmare. Consequently, I'd prefer to have a pic that is actually him&mdash;not just a dream of him&mdash;in the infobox. --Eyrezer 08:55, 5 April 2009 (UTC)

Jaius Yorub

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:22, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guest nom for WP:LE

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 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:24, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 2) *You should be more explicit about Yorub's self-sacrifice in the intro.
 * 3) ** Explicitified.
 * 4) * The image thumbnails are a bit too small and my myopia can't be playing into the fact that I can't see what's going on in at least one.
 * 5) **I tweaked two images (the fleet one and the explosion). How's that?
 * 6) * Mentioning that Dac was the Mon Cal homeworld wouldn't hurt.
 * 7) **Mentioned.
 * 8) * "It was estimated" – I'd specify who made the estimate.
 * 9) **Specified. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:07, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Graestan ( Talk ) 16:03, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 12) *GA Core Fleet should be listed as an affiliation in the infobox.
 * 13) *Seeing as there's only one redlink, could you create an article for the GA Core Fleet Commandos? Even a stub would be nice.
 * 14) *Well done. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 16:00, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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Sun Guard

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 05:47, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Retconneriffic!

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:59, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Here... comes... the Sun... Guard. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 16:05, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * Image is crap, but it's the best we have unless someone can get a shot of that guy from the TPM game. - Lord Hydronium 05:47, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Oh yeah, I've got a couple "likely" and "thought to be" in there; those are exactly how they're phrased in the source. - Lord Hydronium

Sneevel

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:17, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Previously GA, exceeded the 1000-word mark while checking oppositions for the nomination.

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 * 1) From the Trayus Academy in sunny Malibu, CA
 * 2) *Fifty-one word intro can definitly be expanded.
 * 3) *Use of the term "egotistic" is a bit POVish.
 * 4) *Bit of context on podracing and why it was dangerous couldn't hurt. Same for Horizon Skimming
 * 5) *Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) [[Image:Sith_Emblem.svg|30px]]01:53, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * Was there anything to add from Rebel Force: Target? --Eyrezer 08:35, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Viqi "Vichy" Shesh

 * Nominated by: -- Harrar 14:02, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Cold-hearted collaborator. And guest nom for WP:NEGTC!

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 * Viqi Shesh is 100Kbs, yes, and the FA page is a bit choked but I figured I don't care how long she's up here for and she can be read in chunks. She's an odd character to write because we tend to see the manifestation of her actions rather than her actions a lot of the time. -- Harrar 14:02, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * That headshot of Viqi in the infobox looks really warped. At least on my computer it does. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Rawr) 10:26, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Its not just yours. It hurts my eyes. Dark Lord Trayus 19:49, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * I've been reliably informed by JMAS that this is due to the fact that Wikia has not yet updated its cache. It's the proper dimensions, but the cache needs updating. Harrar 22:26, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

Valin Draco

 * Nominated by:Jinzler 00:05, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:My first FA nom

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Dominic Raynor

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 07:00, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "No, Mr. Calrissian, I expect you to die."

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Gallandro

 * Nominated by: Havac 23:51, 7 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Daley + WEG + hired killer = awesome. Now if only KJA hadn't screwed around with it. Havac 23:51, 7 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Add a couple more images. For instance, an image of Odumin wouldn't go amiss. --Eyrezer 03:32, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I generally don't like to do that unless the article is really bereft of images and I'd just be presenting the reading with a big wall of text. For this, I don't think an image every other section is amiss. I'd rather not get into "Han Solo: Gallandro shot him" "The Mor Glayyd: Gallandro was going to duel him" territory unless I really have to, and I don't think this is really a case of have-to. Havac 04:31, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **There are some pretty big walls of text there... I think an image of Anja would be entirely appropriate for the legacy section. --Eyrezer 05:21, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***See how you like that. Havac 22:06, 8 April 2009 (UTC)

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