Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Darth Azard


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Darth Azard

 * Nominated by:  Grunny  (Talk) 12:49, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nom :)

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) Support thee, I do. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:31, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Already raked this squid over the coals on the GAN.  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:39, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:12, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 06:51, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:24, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I support it.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 15:58, 28 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 10:13, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:34, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Image:Darth Azard2.jpg, Image:Darth Azard.jpg, Image:MassacreonDac.jpg, Image:DuelOnDac.jpg, Image:Invoke.jpg and Image:AzardProtectionBubble.jpg are all distorted and should be re-scanned. --Imperialles 18:54, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) *I cannot provide better scans at this time. However, I believe these images are of "of sufficient quality to illustrate the article" as the rules state.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 15:31, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Struck with the caveat that the images be replaced when better versions are available. --Imperialles 07:59, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 4) * Haven't read the whole thing, but I intend to soon. I like the character and had intended to FA him myself someday, so I want the article to be as good as it can be. :-) For a couple of preliminaries: could the "Massacre..." section be split in two? It'll make it more uniform with the size of the other sections and having two images in the same smallish section looks a bit messy, imho (speaking of which, I've reduced the size of some of the images, if that's alright - 300px looks messy). I think the P&T could be expanded a little; elaborate things fully through, for example his feelings about Isen currently get a sentence but I think it could be expanded to a small paragraph. Isen should specifically be mentioned, etc. Also, you could note that he wasn't an expert on Sith lore and history, since he didn't know anything/much about the Leviathan. Last sentence in the BtS will need to be referenced. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:25, 1 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **I've split the "Massacre..." section, expanded the P&T, and referenced the BtS. I like the character too, and I'm waiting for the next issue to expand it fully. I look forward to your thorough review :-).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:14, 2 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Nicely done. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:51, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * The intro looks a little bit too big for an article of its size. Especially when new info will have to be added to it soon. I would suggest cutting it down a little bit, either now or when the next issue is out. I made a few cuts here and there but here are some more suggestions for ones I thought too large to cut without talking to you:
 * 8) ** "after Krayt deposed Emperor Roan Fel" is something I'd definitely say could be cut from the intro, since it's not particularly relevant to Azard.
 * 9) ***Cut :).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) ** "Valan had already faced Stazi, during the last battle of the Sith-Imperial War, and had been blamed for Stazi's escape" - this is another thing that, although it would certainly merit inclusion in the bio, isn't particularly relevant to the intro, which ought to be nicely succinct.
 * 11) ***Also cut.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ** "who had been sent by Emperor-in-exile Roan Fel to warn Gar Stazi that they had sabotaged the Imperious" could be rephrased to "who were on a mission for Emperor-in-exile Roan Fel," or somesuch.
 * 13) ***Rephrased :).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * In the aftermath of the massacre, pursued the escaping members Rogue Squadron who had been involved in the plan to capture the Imperious -- missing a word here, before pursued. Presumably it's Azard, but I wanted to make sure.
 * 15) **Yes it is, silly mistake on my part.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * This isn't an objection, just a pointer: with sentences like "The Toydarian information broker Niffla, informed Valan" that comma is unneeded. Another is "Realizing the officer had been mind-tricked; Azard killed him" - that semicolon should just be a comma. The colon should only be used when the two parts of it could stand alone as separate sentences. I'll obviously fix any instances of these I find, but it's something to watch out for.
 * 17) **I'll check my work for such mistakes :).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * The third paragraph in "Massacre..." trails off from the subject a bit. Obviously the info is necessary to establish, but I think it could be cut down a fair bit in detail.
 * 19) **How's that? :)  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***I wouldn't mind a little bit more cut, but looking at it there's nothing that really stands out so it's up to you.
 * 21) * Ronto's introduced rather suddenly in the P&A, without even a link. I wouldn't even bother to name him, just say the Rogues or whatever.
 * 22) **Good point.  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **Excellent stuff overall, glad to have a new FA writer. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:51, 3 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Thanks AdmirableAckbar :-).  Grunny  (Talk) 02:41, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) ****No worries. Good work on my objections. My only concern is supporting this nom is that we know a fair bit of new info on the character will be released soon, probably after this passes FAN. Not that I don't think you'll do a good job updating, but any new info won't go through the proper FAN review process. I'm not really sure what our procedure should in these cases. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:24, 8 February 2009 (UTC)

Strike Imp's objection
 * 1) --Eyrezer 10:44, 5 March 2009 (UTC) It's been unanswered for just over 2 weeks, and with the new CT, it seems appropriate.
 * 2) CT yadda yadda yadda. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:24, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Sorry, Imp. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:17, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Duh. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:04, 5 March 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Azard appears in the latest Legacy issue, Star Wars Legacy 32: Fight Another Day, Part 1. It looks like he'll also be appearing in issue 33 as well. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:38, 30 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I've added Legacy 32. I'll just have to wait until Legacy 33 comes out :).  Grunny  (Talk) 03:21, 31 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I have now added Legacy 33 :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 12:55, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Personal preference, but considering the new material from Legacy 33, I would like to see the spoiler/endspoiler templates used in the text. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:17, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * I have added the templates :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 10:29, 6 March 2009 (UTC)