Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Cypher Bos


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(6 Inqs/1 User/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:41, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I can (with great difficulty) ignore the first name usage in this instance. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:21, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 14:25, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Cull Tremayne 08:24, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Thefourdotelipsis 08:44, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Graestan ( Talk ) 12:17, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 21:16, 11 May 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) There's info missing from Galaxy 5 which I would be happy to help you out with if you would just quit dodging me in IRC! :-P -- Ozzel 19:52, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Thanks for the scans. I should be able to add it in the morning. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:49, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Sorted. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:40, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Great! -- Ozzel 21:48, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) From the Merciless Hammer of Toprawa:
 * 6) * "Vicious" is POV: "Cypher Bos was a vicious Nalrithian [[bounty hunter]"
 * 7) **Changed.
 * 8) * This is a bit confusing. You say he worked for the Empire and for Jabba, but then wants a place among the Rebellion. Is he infiltrating the Alliance? Please clarify: "hoping to kill Phoedris and take his place as a member of the Alliance to Restore the Republic"
 * 9) ** I see that you mention this later on in the paragraph. This should be explained initially.
 * 10) ***Should be fixed.
 * 11) * Please explain what this mental link is. Something inherent to his species? "after using his mental link with Phoedris to learn many secret Rebel codes"
 * 12) **Any better?
 * 13) * POV: "A vicious, greedy being"
 * 14) **Reworded.
 * 15) * Please reword to say he used a transport as his transportation. Redundant: "He used a YT-1300 Corellian transport as his main method of transportation"
 * 16) **I've removed all mention of it except for the Equipment section, since all we know is that he owned it.
 * 17) * Cause who lasting harm? He, or his brother? This reads ambiguously: "which would ensure that the pain he would share with Phoedris during their inevitable confrontation would not cause him any lasting harm"
 * 18) **Clarified.
 * 19) * I believe you're trying to say here that he smelled the scents of others to detect him, but this really is reading that he somehow utilized a scent by his own doing to detect them, which I don't think is the case: "and he used scents to recognize other species."
 * 20) **Should be cleared up.
 * 21) *Good BTS. Cleaned up some of my own confusion. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:57, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Thanks. And thanks for the copyedit/review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:15, 26 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) From the cockpit of Xwing328
 * 24) * "...he was often taken by surprise when someone managed to disarm him, such as when Han Solo threw his gun-belt at the Nalrithian." Cypher said Han was the first to disarm him, so how could he often be taken by surprise?
 * 25) **Fixed.
 * 26) * "reduced the amount of pain he felt when in combat" They worked any time he felt pain, right? Not just in combat?
 * 27) **Good point. Fixed.
 * 28) *I don't think it's required yet, but if the images could be categorized, that would be great. Thanks, and good work so far! —Xwing328 (Talk) 23:13, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) **I'll try get around to that soon, when I'm not in a rush. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 07:13, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) ***Sounds good! —Xwing328 (Talk) 21:16, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 32) * "The third, Phoedris Bos, was considerably stronger than the two Cypher had killed, so he was more reluctant to engage him in combat." – Please reword with more clarity.
 * 33) **Better?
 * 34) * "He worked &hellip; he worked" in one sentence is a bit heavy. Please change.
 * 35) **Changed.
 * 36) * Quotation marks around "Cypher" in the middle bio section seem unnecessary. Please discuss.
 * 37) **Well, they were put in to avoid confusion for the reader, but you're right in that they're not really necessary. I'm easy, so I've removed them.
 * 38) * "the fear he could sense when in the presence of others" – Please reword and specify.
 * 39) **Any better?
 * 40) * First paragraph of the P&T reads disjointed when the last sentence is added. Can a transition be made?
 * 41) **I removed the last sentence, since it's already discussed in the Equipment section.
 * 42) * Graestan ( Talk ) 02:21, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) **Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 07:13, 9 May 2008 (UTC)

Comments


 * I've been unable to find out who voiced him, though someone who has a physical copy of the thing might know. Also, I haven't referred to him as just "Bos" because he's only ever called "Cypher Bos" or "Cypher." -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:41, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * According to this, the actors were not credited, so I guess we may never know. -- Ozzel 21:53, 20 April 2008 (UTC)