Wookieepedia:Good article nominations



This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

What is a Good article?
A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.

A Good article has the following attributes.

1. It is well written. In this respect:


 * (a) it has compelling prose, and is readily comprehensible to non-specialist readers;
 * (b) it follows a logical structure, introducing the topic and then grouping together its coverage of related aspects; where appropriate, it contains a succinct lead section summarizing the topic, and the remaining text is organized into a system of hierarchical sections (particularly for longer articles);
 * (c) it follows the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies;
 * (d) necessary technical terms or jargon are briefly explained in the article itself, or an active link is provided.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable. In this respect:


 * (a) it provides references to any and all sources used for its material;
 * (b) sources should be selected in accordance with the guidelines for reliable sources;
 * (c) it contains no elements of original research.

3. It is broad in its coverage, addressing all major aspects of the topic (this requirement is slightly weaker than the "comprehensiveness" required by WP:FA, and allows shorter articles and broad overviews of large topics to be listed);.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy. In this respect:


 * (a) viewpoints are represented fairly and without bias;
 * (b) all significant points of view are fairly presented, but not asserted, particularly where there are or have been conflicting views on the topic.

5. It is stable, i.e., it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.

6. It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic. In this respect:


 * (a) the images are properly sourced and have succinct and descriptive captions;
 * (b) a lack of images does not in itself prevent an article from achieving Good Article status.

Nomination of Good articles
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all six requirements stated above. If an article has a net total of five votes of support (+5) after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here.

(+4)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:29, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) This thing isn't 1000 words? Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:37, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:55, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Greyman ( Talk ) 00:22, 11 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) * This is confusing. If he was from Carida, and raised on Carida, what then is his ancestral homeworld? "Vune Willic was brought up on the world of Carida, in the Colonies region of the galaxy, though he never visited his family’s ancestral homeworld"
 * 2) **Addressed.
 * 3) * Reword "homeworld" here. Moving to someplace new doesn't make it a new homeworld, IMO: "Loor allowed Willic several hours to get settled on his new homeworld"
 * 4) **Addressed.
 * 5) * Deducing is kind of a stilted word to use twice in one paragraph. Please reword: "after deducing that his grandfather"
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) * I'm unclear as to his motive here. Did he know he was killing his grandfather? Did the whine tell him that his grandfather was in fact the "Rebel saboteur"? A little more clarification would be good. Any indication that his grandfather really was a Rebel agent? Or was this just a test of him? "As he prepared his sniper rifle, however, he was interrupted by the arrival of Korval. When he pointed the weapon in his grandfather's direction, the rifle began to whine; after deducing that his grandfather was the intended recipient of the rifle's powerful blaster bolt, he fired on his grandfather at close range without hesitation."
 * 8) **Clarified. It's not really clear either way if he was a Rebel or if it was a test; I'd be inclined to say both, but it's not stated or implicitly implied.
 * 9) * I would like to see a little extra added to this. In what capacity did they prove his guilt? In the court of law, for ex? Alone, since they are falsified, they don't prove his guilt, if you understand what I'm saying: "These videos proved that Villic was guilty"
 * 10) **Gotcha. Fixed it up.
 * 11) * Do me a favor and pipelink the correct name of the battle: "After they liberated Coruscant" Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:26, 1 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Done. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:10, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) Quote in "Downfall" needs a source.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:51, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Whoops. Now sourced -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:40, 3 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments

(+4)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:29, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Take this to FA. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:57, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:52, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Greyman ( Talk ) 15:33, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) * Do we know why things went badly? Presumably not, but elaborate if we do: "Things on Mantooine did not go very well"
 * 2) **Nope, he started to explain to Crimson but never got a chance.
 * 3) * If he was never personally harmed by the Empire, but felt for those who were, this should be sympathy, not empathy: "Kaileel was a morally upright being who showed empathy towards the victims of the Empire that he had never met; though he admitted that the Empire had never harmed him personally"
 * 4) **Fixed.
 * 5) * Please reword one of these ship's': "he explicitly told the ship's captain that ship's"
 * 6) **Done.
 * 7) *Hah, I didn't realize I knew who this was and that I had read the story until about half-way through the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:57, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) **Heh. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 02:03, 2 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 10) * You use "Kaileel" too many times in the intro. Otherwise good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:35, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Axed a couple. Thanks, -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:38, 3 March 2008 (UTC)

(+3)
Support
 * 1) Imperialles 00:07, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Greyman ( Talk ) 16:17, 4 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice job, Imp. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:24, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Is there a reason why the article refers to him exclusively by his first name? For greater encyclopedic tone, please reword these instances to refer to him by his last name only in all subsequent mentions following the initial. I understand this may have been done to avoid confusion between George and Jar Jar, but since George is the obvious centerpiece of this article, referring to him almost exclusively as "Binks" will not create confusion.
 * 3) **Done. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * A few things here. First, "that" should be more appropriately reworded as "who"; "Captain" should not be capitalized in this instance. Please specify what he was a captain. It may serve better to move the captain into the next sentence, to say he was the owner and captain of his company, assuming that is the case: "George R. Binks was an Otolla Gungan whaler and Captain that operated and resided on Naboo. He was the owner of Binks & Son Whaling Company"
 * 5) **I removed the "captain" thing. It's not an official rank, it merely means that he commanded his own ship. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * What exactly is a "fateful whale"? "George R. Binks encountered a fateful whale"
 * 7) **Reworded. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Please reword this. We have some idea of when he was born. You can say something like before the fall of the Republic, before whatever date Jar Jar was born, assuming we know that: "George R. Binks was born in Otoh Gunga on Naboo at an unknown point in time,"
 * 9) **Done. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * Please kill this red link. It shouldn't be that hard: "He eventually married another woman, not out of love"
 * 11) **Done. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Please reword this so each clause doesn't end in it: "He attempted to harpoon it, but merely angered it"
 * 13) **Done. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * I would rather like to see this sentence arranged so that the parenthetical prose can be removed: "(a suicidal task due to the treacherous seas as well the distance involved)"
 * 15) **Dashes! --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * Please change "that" to "who": "George R. Binks was an experienced whaler and sailor that took"
 * 17) **Done. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * The article could benefit from a BTS.
 * 19) **BTS added. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * Since you provide referencing for Jar Jar's birth, it would be best to go ahead and source the entire article, even though he has but one appearance
 * 21) **Done. --Imperialles 00:55, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) One more thing:
 * 23) * After looking at the link to their island, I see that he decided to name the piece of land after himself. Please make a mention of this in the article someplace. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:04, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **Done. --Imperialles 14:00, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments

(+0)
Support
 * 1) AdmiralNick22 01:25, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose'
 * Toprawa:
 * 1) *Hey, Nick. I'm glad to see you brought this over the GAN page. Here we can mold this thing into a sharp-looking article, and when more issues and more information comes out, you can try for the FA once it reaches 1000 words.
 * 2) **What is the total word count, at the moment? AdmiralNick22 03:25, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) ***I'm not sure. Copy your text into MS Word, if you have it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:19, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ****I did a count and it is just over 1000 words. Plus it was grow in length once Legacy #21 comes out next week. So minimum length will no longer be a problem. AdmiralNick22 21:06, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * First of all, it's imperative that everything is sourced, the infobox included. Go through the article make sure that all information is properly cited by correct referencing, and that no paragraphs end without a reference tag at the end. Currently, I see 6 paragraphs that do not have complete sourcing.
 * 6) **Done. I just sourced the info box, as well as made sure each paragraph ends in a source.AdmiralNick22 03:25, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * For cosmetic purposes, all article images should alternate from right to left down the sides of the page. Make sure you move the second image in the body to the right hand side.
 * 8) **Done. AdmiralNick22 03:25, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * The succession box at the bottom of the page needs to be completely sourced, just like the infobox. You may wish to refer to other articles to get a sense of how to do this. I personally like the Raith Sienar article. Feel free to use that as a model.
 * 10) **Done. AdmiralNick22 03:25, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) *Once you finish these items, we can move into sharpening the prose. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:24, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **If you have no objections, I think we can move on to examining the prose. AdmiralNick22 21:06, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *We'll go through this a section at a time.
 * 14) * You begin off the first section assuming the reader knows who and what Stazi is, apparently relying on what you have in the intro. When you start off the body, pretend the intro doesn't even exist and start out fresh. Describe who Stazi is, what species he is, etc. first, before going into the war.
 * 15) **I already say in the first paragraph that "Admiral Stazi was a prominent fleet commander, heading the Galactic Alliance Core Fleet, which was charged with protecting the capital world Coruscant and other key Core Worlds." Isn't that sufficent? AdmiralNick22
 * 16) * Explain what the Core Fleet is, what affiliation it has in addition to what you have
 * 17) **Same as above. I already refer to it as the "Galactic Alliance Core Fleet" and that it is designed to protect the Core. Not oly is that factual, but that is all we know at this point. AdmiralNick22 03:26, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * Elaborate on why Caamas is so important that an attack is being formulated
 * 19) **Done. Excellent point, BTW. AdmiralNick22 03:26, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * This clause is written as if you have previously explained what happened at the meeting, in which Stazi apparently disagreed with the plan. Elaborate on what happened to back this up: "Still wary of the battle plan proposed by Rear Admiral Piers Petan"
 * 21) **Done.
 * 22) * If possible, I would like to see a greater explanation of Stazi's role at the Battle of Caamas. And, explain how and why Veed gained this advantage: "Still wary of the battle plan proposed by Rear Admiral Piers Petan"
 * 23) **We don't know much about Stazi's exact actions at Caamas at this point, other than that he lead the fighting withdrawal and saved part of the fleet. Until #21 comes out, there is nothing more to add. AdmiralNick22 03:26, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Also, at the end of that paragraph, you end the last two sentences with the same word. Please reword to avoid this.
 * 25) **Done. AdmiralNick22 03:26, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * "Legend" seems to imply a favorable, admirable connotation. Did they really feel this way? "His performance at Caamas made him a legend among the Empire"
 * 27) **My quote for the "Meeting on the Wheel" section backs this comment up. There is direct dialouge from a Imperial officer that he is a legend. AdmiralNick22 03:26, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) Round Two:
 * 29) * Briefly explain what the Alliance remnant is. Is it the remains of the collapsed Alliance over these 7 years? If possible, elaborate on how/why he came into leadership: "By 137 ABY, Stazi lead the Galactic Alliance Remnant."
 * 30) **Done. AdmiralNick22 04:15, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * This sentence isn't really saying anything. Is there any way that harassing someone would ever make them less of a threat? "Over time, his attacks proved to make his forces more of a threat to the Sith, rather than less of one"
 * 32) **Done. IIRC, that I included that line because it was in 0.5. AdmiralNick22 04:15, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) *Why is this so? Who was Fel attacking to make things difficult for Stazi? "though supplies were increasingly tight due to similar actions undertaken by Roan Fel's Loyalist forces on Bastion" Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:27, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **This one comes directly from #9. The issue doesn't elaborate any more on this other than to say both were competeing for scare resources.AdmiralNick22 04:15, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) ***Would it be possible to say that he was doing this for the benefit of some group? Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:53, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) ****Both Stazi and Fel were doing it for the benefit of their respective forces. If the line is preventing you from supporting the article, I am fine to remove it. :-) AdmiralNick22 02:53, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) *****I like the sentence fine. It's good information, it just needs a little bit more info for clarification. Please add something to say who/what was benefiting by Fel's actions. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:40, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) ******Done. AdmiralNick22 04:10, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) I suspect there is a mistake in that quote. Shouldn't "your" be "you're"? --Eyrezer 03:36, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) *Fixed. AdmiralNick22 04:01, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 42) * Expand the intro. I'll add more comments later.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:59, 6 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) **Done. I expanded the intro to mention his command of the Core Fleet before the S-I War. AdmiralNick22 03:26, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) It's rather image light. And when I say that, I mean images of Stazi himself. One image of his flagship is probably enough; I would replace the second one with an image of Stazi himself and add another in the P&T. Also, the intro could be beefed up by another 3-4 lines. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:07, 8 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) *I have added two new Stazi pictures, as well as moved the picture of the breakout at Caamas down a bit. I have also added a bit to the intro. AdmiralNick22 23:01, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) **Looks much better with the images, though I would replace the one in the P&T with one from Legacy 0 1/2. That's not really an objection though, just a preference. The intro, however, is still a bit short and undetailed for my liking; if you look at some of the other current nominations, they are a few lines longer, and broken up into two paragraphs. I haven't given the article a proper review, but, looking at it at a glance, the level of detail is generally lacking. I would recommend you take a look at some GAs or FAs promoted by good writers (someone like Greyman, Toprawa, Goodwood or Chack) to get a better idea of what I mean. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:28, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 47) ***In regards to extra detail, keep in mind that this character has appeared in a total of three issues so far. There is not that much more to include, but I will try to beef up some of the sections. As for the picture, I don't want to change the main image for Stazi. However, I could put the uncropped version of the main picture in the P&T section. That way we have a full shot of Stazi from head to toe. As for the intro, I will beef that up a bit tonight. Thanks for the advice. AdmiralNick22 00:38, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) ****I've read everything he's appeared in, so I know exactly how much detail should be there. And, just to clarify, I'm talking about detail and not length, in case you were unsure. I'll give you an example: you've got three sentences about how Corde foiled the meeting and Stazi stormed off. What you don't have is how exactly she made their ships fire on each other, that Corde wasn't sent as a saboteur and it was merely coincidence she was there at the same time as them, that Stazi's ship and the guards outside gave him away, that Stazi was going to kill Bovark before Draco entered the room (note that that is just an example, and there's probably more of the same kind of thing before and after). As it is, while the reader can get a basic sense of what's going on, if they haven't read the source material it's all a bit hazy. Same in the last section of the biography. You need to explain exactly what's going on, even if some of it isn't directly related to Stazi himself; it is necessary for proper context. The article needs to be written so that someone who's never heard of Legacy can instantly know exactly what's going on. I'm not saying the level of detail is poor or anything, but it's not enough for me to support the article. I still suggest you read an FA or GA of a character that you know a lot about: Harkas or Kol Skywalker being good examples of Legacy FAs (you could also look at Simus, which is an FA, a character who appears only in a single issue of a comic). The intro looks fine, though if you're gonna push for FA later on I would lengthen it further (but to clarify, that's not an objection here). About the images...it isn't necessary to have the same picture, albeit cropped, twice in this article, as there are plenty of other images available. I'll try to upload the Legacy 0 1/2 one later today and we'll see how that fits. Another thing I've noticed: the BtS should include who created him, when he was first mentioned, when we first saw him, probably which artists have drawn him, and the like, with self-sourcing statements. Also, the Duro admiral thing in the BtS needs to be sourced. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:01, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) *****When I get home from work today I will expand upon sections like the Meeting on the Wheel, as well as osme of the others. If you have a chance, please upload the picture of Admiral Stazi with a knife from #10. That would be a good picture for the P&T. I also just sourced the bit about Duro admirals, as well as added info on who created Stazi and who has drawn him. Once I beef up the detail in a few paragraphs I think you will like the article better. AdmiralNick22 13:41, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) ******What you've done there is perfect; exactly what I was looking for. I do have one tiny issue with it, though: you say that "Corde managed to make it appear that Bovark's Imperial shuttle opened fire on Admiral Stazi's shuttle". This should be clarified, as the shuttle did actually open fire, as did Stazi's. Now, I would like you to do something similar with the Battle of Mon Calamari section, and explain how they planned to nab the Star Destroyer, how Gahan got his hands on the codes and what part he was going to play, how Stazi knew it was a trap but decided to go in anyway, et cetra. I'll get on uploading those images right away. You're doing really well on this; keep up the good work! :) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:57, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 51) *I've added two images, which I certainly adds to the article. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:31, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) **Thanks for the images, AdmirableAckbar. I have fixed that bit about "appeared to fire". As for the "battle of Mon Calamari", I will expand that section tonight. Then, after #21 comes out tomorrow, I will expand it even further. I have a good feeling we are getting closer to getting this article perfect! I appreciate your help. AdmiralNick22 00:16, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 53) **Done. I have expanded the Battle of Mon Calamari section to eplain Gahan's plan. Tomorrow when I get home from work I will add the new info on the outcome of the battle. AdmiralNick22 00:55, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) ***Looks much better. I'm going to be avoiding the article for a while until my Russian friend gets Legacy 21, since they don't really sell comics in my homeland. However, once I've read it, I'll give the article another look and hopefully vote for it. :) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:03, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 55) ****Thanks. I hope you enjoy the issue. And I also hope you end up voting for the article as well. Thanks again for all your help. :-) AdmiralNick22 02:53, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I was a bit premature in promoting Gar Staiz for featured status. However, thanks to kind and helpful feedback from several posters and Admins, I think that this is the place to start. I have added a few pictures, as well as increased the overall length. I plan to expand on some of the sections over the coming days as well. Please let me know any advice/opinions you have on getting this article to Good and eventually FA status. AdmiralNick22 01:25, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * In the future, make sure you place your nominations above the categories section below. (Note: read this in the "editing" view.) Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:28, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Hey guys, I addressed the issues yu brought up about prose. Please let me know if you feel I have met the changes you requested and if you have any more. AdmiralNick22 14:20, 8 March 2008 (UTC) 14:09, 8 March 2008 (UTC)
 * If no one has any more reccomendations, I would appreciate you vote for the article. This has been a great learning experience for me, as it is the first article I have ever nominated AND put this much effort into. :-) AdmiralNick22 20:14, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

(+0)
Support

Tommy9281 ( Ouch!! ) 2pm, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) I'm nominating this article because, well, I think it's a good one! I really put a lot of work into it, and it doesn't require regular maintaining.  I believe it meets all the requirements to be nominated for a Good Article.

Thanks!

Oppose Tommy9281 ( Ouch!! ) 6:22pm EST, 10 March 2008 (UTC) Comments
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *The infobox must be completely sourced.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) ***The infobox is still unsourced. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *The introduction is far too short. Please expand. It should be a good sized paragraph considering the length of this article.
 * 6) **Addressed.
 * 7) *Two things here. One, you pipelink Republic forces to some Rocket Jumper. This seems strange and unnecessary. Was this the only individual fighting in the battle? Also, briefly explain who the Naddists were: "to find a massive battle taking place between Republic forces and the Naddists"
 * 8) **Addressed.
 * 9) *Elaborate on what you mean here: "...Nadd realized Ommin had failed"
 * 10) *Briefly explain what space grazers are to give this sentence greater substance: " Aleema used her sorcery to create illusions of space grazers to fool the fleet"
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) *Terrible is a bit POV. Please reword: "her Battle Meditation allowing the Republic forces to ignore the terrible apparitions"
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) *Please explain exactly why they were defeated. The aforementioned bombers? "the Republic detachment was forced to withdraw"
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) *I'm guessing he's doing this as part of his vengeance streak. Explain what his intentions were by infiltrating: "Qel-Droma soon after attempted to infiltrate Cinnagar, the capital world the of Empress Teta system"
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) *Please provide a brief description of what the Iron Citadel is: " and had Qel-Droma interrogated and tortured in the dungeons of the Iron Citadel"
 * 19) **Addressed.
 * 20) *You never actually specify that he had turned to the dark side, just that he was administered a poison that would ensure his doing so. Please clarify: "The vengeful former Jedi repelled the attack"
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) *This clausal confusion makes it seem as though Mandalore the Indomitable, a she, is feigning affection, which I'm sure is not the case: "Although she feigned affection for him once he returned, Mandalore the Indomitable made Ulic aware of Aleema's treachery"
 * 23) **Addressed.
 * 24) *Please come up with a better section title than Endgame. Very uncreative.
 * 25) **Addressed.
 * 26) *Please reword this to avoid using corrupt twice in a row: "She was naive to the fact that the dark side had a corruptive nature, and would surely twist and corrupt her."
 * 27) **Addressed.
 * 28) *Additionally, that sentence needs to be sourced. You'll see the tag.
 * 29) **Addressed.
 * 30) *You capitalized "Sith Sorceress" in the image caption, but do not do so in the article. Choose one, the correct one, and stick with it.
 * 31) **Addressed.
 * 32) *Whoa, where did this information come from? This definitely needs to be included into the main biography section somwhere: "when she had Lord Keto lowered into a vat of molten carbonite."
 * 33) **Addressed.
 * 34) *As does this: "Her short-temper was displayed again when she burned tutor Korus alive for simply spilling a drink on her."
 * 35) **Addressed.
 * 36) *Source this sentence: "She was not above using her powers to horrify and terrorize those around her."
 * 37) **Addressed.
 * 38) *Please reword this, which basically reads she "energized by energy": "...seemingly energized by them"
 * 39) **Addressed.
 * 40) *Please paraphrase this direct quote: "telling him, "keep steady, we are going to live!""
 * 41) **Addressed.
 * 42) *Please reword. Up to par with what? "Her Force sense was also up to par (more so than Satal's)"
 * 43) **Addressed.
 * 44) *This sentence seems dubious. Did she truly often conjure up things things? Or did she only do it once? Also, either seems to suggest a previous sentence in which you mention she was not limited in something, but one does not exist. Please reword this sentence as appropriate: "Aleema preferred using Sith magic to conjure apparitions, usually of Adegan eels or other hideous lizards, but she was not limited there either."
 * 45) **Addressed.
 * 46) *In the past when? "In the past she created mass illusions"
 * 47) **Addressed.
 * 48) *Please reword this sentence. Nothing in the article implies that she was all-powerful: "She was not all-powerful, however."
 * 49) **Addressed.
 * 50) *Please paraphrase instead: "she brushed off the attack saying to Satal, "Tell me, Satal – what warrior can stand who believes his sword has ceased to be a sword?""
 * 51) **Addressed.
 * 52) *Please reword: "into snakes that proceeded to attack the attackers."
 * 53) **Addressed.
 * 54) *Just confirming that this was indeed more than one supernova: "the ensuing supernovae"
 * 55) **Addressed.
 * 56) *I would really like to see the BTS expanded. Please include sentences including who first created the character, in what source she made her first appearance, and any other notable appearances that greatly expanded her character.
 * 57) **Working on.
 * 58) *The source list needs to be organized by real-word publication dates
 * 59) **Working on.
 * 60) *Please organize the categories into alphabetical order.
 * 61) **Addressed.
 * 62) *Some advice:
 * 63) **You often add double spaces between periods and such. Although this doesn't show up in the article, it's really unnecessary. Just single space.
 * 64) **I'm seeing a number of instances in which you pipelink important concepts by just giving them a vague description instead of actually specifying what these things are; i.e., planets, names of starships, etc. I've gone through and changed these things for you, but only use pipelinking as a last resort. Always specify what it is you're talking about for greater comprehension.
 * 65) **Always remember to italicize ship names. I've cleaned these up for you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:54, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 66) From the Editor-in-Chief:
 * 67) *Mention Ulic's method of recruiting Mandalore.
 * 68) *Reword the BtS sentence to say something about the shared name, but don't speculate as to ancestry. Also, add a blurb about her appearance information, i.e. which issues, who wrote her character, etc.
 * 69) *There's a redlink to an audio dramatization in the reflist that might have an article to link to.
 * 70) *We're taking this to FA eventually, so let me know if you want any assistance.
 * 71) * Graestan ( Talk ) 21:30, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I fixed the red link parts, Graestan. I'm also interested in FA status, but I didn't want to reach big just yet.  Thanks for the help,
 * 1) In the article's BtS, it is stated that Sebban Keto may be a relative of Satal and Aleema, but according to this article from Wizards.com, it says that Sebban is "A descendant of the same family that produced Satal Keto". Since Aleema is from that family (She was Satal's cousin), that needs to be incorporated in the article somewhere, and removed from the Bts. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:06, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Tommy, since you nominated this, feel free to sign your name in the support section so known it's your nomination and that you'll be looking after it :) Greyman ( Talk ) 14:11, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Tommy, one should never strike another user's objections. I've unstricken them; in future, leave a note saying you've addressed an objection and wait for the objector to review and strike him- or herself. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:31, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. I'll work on correcting those things which I was unable to fix immediately. I really appreciate your input. Tommy9281 ( Ouch!! ) 6:43pm EST, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Toprawa,

(+5)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:00, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Supported.  Tommy9281 ( Ouch!! ) 2:20pm, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Graestan ( Talk ) 23:35, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:05, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 18:38, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Object

Comments
 * Expect a lot more TOTJ noms on this page, folks ;) WP:TOTJ is back. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:00, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

(+3)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. Greyman ( Talk ) 21:01, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Graestan ( Talk ) 00:14, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 18:44, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Object

Comments
 * And WP:TOTJ keeps on rolling... Greyman ( Talk ) 21:01, 10 March 2008 (UTC)

(+3)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. Greyman ( Talk ) 04:41, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Graestan ( Talk ) 01:19, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Where do all these TOTJ page come from? :P --Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 18:52, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Object

Comments
 * And another&hellip; Greyman ( Talk ) 04:41, 11 March 2008 (UTC)

(+0)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. igordebraga ≠ 05:13, 11 March 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) *Igordebraga, I appreciate your interest in nominating this article, but as it stands, it is a very long way from being up to GA standards. The article was once a Featured Article, but was removed because it was lacking necessary elements. Please see this page for details. Upon a cursory glance, entire sections lack sourcing, and many important concepts seem to be haphazardly summarized. This is without reading the article at all. A hefty amount of work still to be done. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:49, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Maulsnarl.jpg is unsourced. --LtNOWIS

Comments


 * Well, I do not really understand this nomination. If it speeds up the improvement of the article's standards, it is fine, but given the topic and extent of the article, the main goal should be restoring it to featured status. Domlith 09:24, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

(+3)
Support
 * 1) As part of WP:TOTJ -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:55, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I supported it the first time, found it again last night and poked Acky to renominate it. Not much has changed since it was last nominated, so here we are. Greyman ( Talk ) 14:19, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:51, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Great job. Graestan ( Talk ) 14:57, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Something is strange here. It might just be a forgotten word: "that Nazzar should remain in seclusion from the rest of the galaxy, that all philosophical systems in disagreement with Ulizra"
 * 3) **Fixed. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Star systems? If so, please clarify: "Spread over three systems"
 * 5) **It's been fixed. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Please stick the description after the first mention of praefect in the previous paragraph: "the heads of each of the sects of the Nazzar religion".
 * 7) **Added. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Please provide a year for this description for greater comprehension: "That attitude continued into the time of the New Jedi Order"
 * 9) **We can't give a year, since no year has been given. The exact quote from the UAA is, "This attitude persists into the New Jedi Order era. Nazzri has yet to accept invitations to become part of the New Republic." Any year that we would add would be speculation. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ***I got ya. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:58, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * This could probably benefit from the same: "during the Yuuzhan Vong invasion"
 * 12) **Exact same situation as above. It doesn't give us a time line for reference when it mentioned the Vong. Please let me know if the quote from the UAA is required. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *Nice job on the BTS. I always like to see it done like that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:02, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 15) * "Ulizra" used too many times too close together in one paragraph.
 * 16) **I believe I've fixed this. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * First paragraph of "Biology and appearance" could use some sprucing up, a little prettier prose.
 * 18) **Fixed, I believe. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * Two sentences in a row beginning with "many" is too many.
 * 20) **Got it. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Nothing to draw from FNU or DLotS? I find this unlikely.
 * 22) **Well, the only thing from the FNU and DLotS is that Qrrrl Toq fought in them. Nothing about the Nazzar is revealed. However, Toq's involvement in both conflicts is mentioned in the article, so I've added the appropriate reference tags. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Graestan ( Talk ) 02:15, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * This was written a long time ago, by me, but it's nomination failed since no one really read it. So I'm giving it another shot :) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:55, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for seeing to the objections, Greyman. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:34, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

(+2)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:11, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Graestan ( Talk ) 02:33, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Object

Comments
 * Huh? What's that? Oh ya, WP:TOTJ keeps on rolling. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:11, 12 March 2008 (UTC)

(+4)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. Graestan ( Talk ) 18:46, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Greyman ( Talk ) 20:14, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:06, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:23, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Infobox needs to be fully sourced, please.  Greyman ( Talk ) 19:50, 12 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Part of a series on the Krath Holy Crusade. Graestan ( Talk ) 18:46, 12 March 2008 (UTC)

(+3)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. Greyman ( Talk ) 22:07, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Graestan ( Talk ) 02:43, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Very nice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:43, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) * Please specify what this is, assuming it's not hand-to-hand: "and fight with the traditional weapon of the Mandalorian forefathers"
 * 2) **Changed to "bladed weapon"&hellip; there is no article for the weapon, which appears nowhere else. Graestan ( Talk ) 00:40, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * Please order source list by publication date. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:31, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 00:40, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * And another&hellip; Greyman ( Talk ) 22:07, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for clearing up the objections while I was away, Grae. Greyman ( Talk ) 04:02, 14 March 2008 (UTC)