Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Elke Vetter


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Elke Vetter

 * Nominated by:  Grunny  ( Talk ) 06:33, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Back to Legacy

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 05:04, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Cylka  -talk- 05:46, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Why not?--Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:55, 17 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 14:18, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 14:50, 29 March 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * using the information to decide that she could let Marasiah lead her to her father or he would come to save her. Can this be reworded? The flow is a bit messed up.
 * 3) **How's that?
 * 4) * Talon used the Force to interrogate Vetter Used the Force in what way? Torture, or mind tricks?
 * 5) **Mentioned :).
 * 6) * The fact that she gave in to Talon's interrogation should be in the P&T. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 11:14, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Mentioned. Thanks for reviewing as always Soresu, let me know if you see more that needs doing :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 02:39, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) Cylka:
 * 9) * Why were they hiding in the Imperial Mission temple?
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) * I believe the paragraph would flow a bit better if you mentioned that Krayt ordered Talon to kill Roan Fel before going into how they were hiding in the temple on Socorro.
 * 12) **Moved things around a little, how's it looking now? :)
 * 13) * If you are going to mention Talon's promotion to Krayt's Hand, then Hand needs a bit more context.
 * 14) **Contextified.
 * 15) * I would change the wording around a bit in either the intro or the article proper so that both paragraph don't read word for word. I believe it will give the article a better flow.
 * 16) **Changed.
 * 17) *Another well done article, Grunny! Cylka  -talk- 11:34, 9 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thanks, Cylka :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 03:47, 10 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 20) * Context on how Vetter was Fel's master in the intro, please.
 * 21) **Contextified.
 * 22) * If I read "the proceeding Anti-Sith Insurgency" one more time I'll crack like an egg.
 * 23) **Changed it up :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 03:29, 25 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) * Graestan ( Talk ) 16:55, 24 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 26) * "In Star Wars Legacy 13: Ready to Die, Roan Fel tells Darth Kruhl that all Imperial Knights are equipped with cortosis gauntlets, which deactivate lightsabers on contact, however, Vetter's hand is severed through her gauntlet." - I understand why you put this in the BTS, but I don't think it's relevant. The issuing of cortosis gauntlets could easily have been done at some point after Vetter's death, she might not have gotten the memo, etc.
 * 27) **Good point, it has been removed.
 * 28) *Nice job, Grunny. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 23:40, 27 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) **Thanks, Tranner :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 01:18, 28 March 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Is there a picture of Talon killing Vetter with Force lightning? If so, maybe it should be added. If not, then it needs to be uploaded. I put this here because it's not an objection, just a suggestion.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:55, 17 March 2009 (UTC)