Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Mission to the Naboo mountains

Mission to the Naboo Mountains

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 18:51, July 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Pourquoi pas? Thats why not? for all you non-europeans.

Moffship

 * Needs to follow the Layout Guide. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 18:54, July 15, 2010 (UTC)

QGJ

 * Underlinking. In the intro alone Trade Federation, Invasion of Naboo, Naboo, Captain, Kael, smuggler should be linked. Please go through the article and add more links.
 * Done
 * As far as I know, Nal Raka Criminal Empire was never mentioned in Battle for Naboo. Therefore, it is speculation to add it as a participant. For what its worth, Borvo could have founded it only after the events on Naboo.
 * Borvo's article doesn't specify creation date, so i'm going to leave it in there.
 * That's exactly my point. If the creation date is not specified, then how come you know that it was already formed by the time of the Battle of Naboo and not later? Unless it is stated in the source, it is speculation to add the Criminal Empire as a participant.
 * Was it stated that OOM-9 commanded Trade Federation forces during this specific battle? I don't think so.
 * Well, no, but he was the commander of all Trade Federation droid forces, per Star Wars: Galactic Battlegrounds. Any other commander would be "unknown." Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 09:40, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Same point as above. Even though it was established that he was the commander of Trade Federation forces, it doesn't mean that he commanded them personally during every single engagement on the planet. If there's no known commander, then just leave that section blank.
 * Due to the short length of the article, the subsections in "the mission" section are not necessary.
 * Taken out
 * The one-sentence long "aftermath" section doesn't look very nice either. You can safely integrate it to the end of "the mission."
 * Expanded
 * I'd like you to add one or two more quotes. One to the "prelude" and one to "the mission" would be ideal.
 * One at mission, one at end. Although I could add another one from Kael if those don't fit.
 * Gamemechanics would be nice for the moment describing the bonus objective.
 * Used properly?
 * It is now.
 * I've corrected this one for you, but in the future please note how conjectural titles should be bolded to avoid them looking like a canonical name.
 * Thanks for checking it over. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 10:46, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * That's it from me. Not bad. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:38, July 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * A couple more. First of all, it is not very clear that the freighter that Sykes protected was Borvo's. Please reword it to make it more clear.
 * Add some context on Kol Kotha. Who was he? QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 15:08, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Addressed. Thanks again for your assistance. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 15:33, July 29, 2010 (UTC)

Xd1358

 * Per QGJ above, please remove the "Unknown" from the infobox. If it isn't stated in the game that he's unknown (y'know, I think someone knows him), remove it.
 * Anything in the intro should be in the body as well.
 * Do not link to redirects (NRSF, Droid starfighter, B1 Battle Droid)
 * Does the source say that the battle took place in 32 BBY? Otherwise, source the date.
 * If the article has information from more that one source, everything needs to be referenced.
 * The introduction tells basically nothing about the mission itself. Expand, please.
 * "Sykes switched from his N-X Police Cruiser to a landspeeder, after his fighter was damaged by patrolling droid starfighterss." Confusing sentence. "After Sykes' N-X Police Cruiser was damaged by patrolling droid starfighters, he switched to a landspeeder. would read better.
 * More to come. -- 1358  (Talk) 18:42, July 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the update. I attempted to expand the intro. The source does indeed take place in 32 BBY, and the article is entirely composed of information from the source. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 19:50, July 29, 2010 (UTC)