Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Horton Salm


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Horton Salm

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:19, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Shock horror! Non-DarkStryder nom goodness!

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) "Gray Leader, standing by."  Graestan ( Talk ) 17:18, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grunny  (Talk) 06:36, 28 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:20, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Good stuff. More Rogue Squadron, more I say! Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:33, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:12, 5 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:05, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 2) * Cav. Cav. Cav, Cav, Cav. You don't mention Y-wings in the intro whatsoever.
 * 3) **Grae. Grae, Grae, Grae, Grae. I do now.
 * 4) * It should be mentioned in the bio that Gray Squadron and Aggressor Wing flew S3s, and that Defender wing flew A4s (source for the A4s being Wedge's Gamble).
 * 5) **Mentions included.
 * 6) * Jake Farrell also flew on the Death Star run.
 * 7) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 8) * A mention of Commando Team One in the Brentaal section would be more than appropriate.
 * 9) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 10) * Second paragraph of "Initial raid" is a bit unwieldy.
 * 11) **Split into two paragraphs.
 * 12) * "Training commander" is an incredibly long section with one monster of a paragraph at the beginning. Please restructure.
 * 13) **Broken up, split into sections.
 * 14) * Same with the second paragraph of "The First Battle of Borleias."
 * 15) **Broken up into two paragraphs.
 * 16) *More later. Graestan ( Talk ) 06:02, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **I am awash with anticipation :P - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:28, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * Context for the Redemption scenario.
 * 19) **Added.
 * 20) * Context for Home One.</s.
 * 21) **Added.
 * 22) * You should mention that the pilots were kept in the dark as to Boreleias's location if you're to later mention that Horn found the location through Whistler's data.
 * 23) **Added.
 * 24) * Context for the Katana fleet.
 * 25) **Added. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 10:52, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) *That's all. Graestan ( Talk ) 03:56, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) Okay, I had to come back with one more. No Fact File information? If so, any you want to share? ^_^  Graestan ( Talk ) 05:48, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) *Struck before I added, eh? Trusting of you :) Found and added in any case. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:03, 27 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 30) * " As the evacuation transports were cleared for vertical" Vague wording. What does "vertical" mean?
 * 31) **Reworded/ clarified.
 * 32) * Please link to starfighter combat somewhere in there.
 * 33) **Done.
 * 34) * "alm was surprised by this turn of events, and angry when he learned that General Airen Cracken, head of New Republic Intelligence, had known that Celchu was innocent all along, and was indignant that his fellow officer had allowed him to berate, suspect, and treat Celchu with disdain, all the while knowing the truth." Bit of a run-on here.
 * 35) **Broken up.
 * 36) * "However, as Decipher identified him as Horton Salm, this is now incorrect." Sentence is not self-sourcing.
 * 37) **Reworded, added info from CSWE.
 * 38) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:42, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 40) * Capitalization of Alliance Fleet and Imperial Fleet is inconsistent.
 * 41) **Capitalised appropriate mentions.
 * 42) * Assault on the Brentaal IV moonbase: "Salm met with Rogue Squadron's Captain Antilles and Tycho Celchu." Since they've both been mentioned before, and Wedge is addressed by surname only, it would read better if Tycho was likewise. Presumably it's Lieutenant Celchu.
 * 43) **Fixed.
 * 44) * Battle of Brentaal IV is linked to multiple times between the different sections. Last I checked we should only link to an article once in the body. You can leave this one if you insist&mdash;it won't stop me supporting.
 * 45) **It's done that way since each link pipelinks to specific section in the Battle of Brentaal IV article (see nom below); I did this because I felt that one of the objections would be to have articles for each engagement in the campaign since they are technically separate battles, so I pre-empted it, rewrote the Battle of Brentaal IV article at the same time and matched them up.
 * 46) * Inconsistent capitalization of various TIE types.
 * 47) **All&mdash;starfighter, bomber and interceptor&mdash;should be lower case now.
 * 48) * Command of Folor Base: "Despite having worked with Commander Antilles in the past." He was a captain last we heard. Mention his promotion, please.
 * 49) **Fixed.
 * 50) * Feint at Jagga-Two and the Second Battle of Borleias: "At a point where the system's planetary bodies restricted hyperspace entry vectors, the New Republic fighters entered hyperspace." This seems to contradict itself. Please rephrase or explain. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:25, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 51) **It is contradictory isn't it? Good catch - hopefully the revision is to your liking. Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:56, 26 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Several of the internal links to the Battle of Brentaal IV article don't quite match up yet - they will do when I post my rewrite of that article in the next day or two. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:19, 16 January 2009 (UTC)