Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Exodeenian


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Exodeenian

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 07:31, 1 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:20, 1 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:22, 1 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 03:55, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Looks good! ~ SavageBob 06:24, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 04:33, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Very good attempt to deal with an obscure topic. Andykatib 21:47, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 05:11, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 8)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 05:42, 10 July 2009 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Just one: The capitalisation of Senate is inconsistent; I believe it us usually capitalised. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:55, 1 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Should be fixed now. Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 09:17, 1 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Farlstendoiro, with more suggestions than objections
 * 5) * Which one is the "first arm" in a six-armed species? Is that Exodeenian nomenclature? (If so, it should be specified: "what the Exodeenians called first arm").
 * 6) **Unfortunately, there is no info provided as to what first and second arms might mean. Given that, I think it works ok the way it is now.
 * 7) * When you say "Some non-Exodeenians were familiar with this etiquette", do you mean that most non-Exodeenians were not familiar? Or we don't have this information?
 * 8) **Yes, it's implied that most would not be familiar with it. Leia Organa is "astonished" to see that Meido is familiar with their etiquette.
 * 9) * Suggestion: 2 paragraphs in society and culture; the pasta thing is not related with their arm-based protocol.
 * 10) **Done
 * 11) * despite having worked for the Empire, albeit in a minor position. It's hard to follow the paragraph of this sentence; what do you think about simply removing "albeit."
 * 12) **I've reworded it a bit.
 * 13) * However, the vote never occurred as Organa Solo resigned from her post after being personally threatened by Kueller, a former Jedi-trainee and the ruler of Almania, who claimed responsibility for the Senate bombing. Could you please re-order this paragraph chronologically? Something like: Soon afterwards, Kueller, a former Jedi-trainee and ruler of Almania, claimed responsability for the Senate bombings and personally threatened Organa Solo; as a consequence of that, Organa Solo resigned from her post before the vote could take place.
 * 14) **Reworded as per your suggestion.
 * 15) * --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:14, 1 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) The Jedi Council administers a lie detector test:
 * 17) *All of these objections concern the first paragraph of the History section:
 * 18) * The fight was on Muunilinst, not Mygeeto.
 * 19) * It was not in a bar, it was in a tent where the Podracers and their crew members hung out.
 * 20) * The Sneevels were only random participants in the brawl; the instigator was primarily a Phlog named Haari Ikreme Beeerd (who doesn't have an article yet). Beeerd was backed up in the taunts by an unidentified Glymphid and an unidentified Nuknog.
 * 21) *Otherwise, it looks good. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 05:30, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) **Much appreciated for the correction, Master Jonathon. How does it look now? --Eyrezer 03:04, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) Toprawa:
 * 24) * The article's layout should adhere to the stipulated section titles of the Layout Guide, per GAN rule 4. I'm sorry if you disagree with the leeway one is allowed when merging sections, but the Layout Guide does not stipulate creating new section titles in conjunction with the merge. If you feel the Layout Guide needs changing, I encourage you to start a CT for this purpose. Until that time, please stick with the site's agreed-upon format. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:36, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) **Ready for archiving. --Eyrezer 05:54, 10 July 2009 (UTC)