Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Disciples of Twilight


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Disciples of Twilight

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 03:02, October 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Easy work. No references, since only source is the Legacy Era Campaign Guide. Thanks to Master Jonathan for pre-nom copy-edit and review.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 03:02, October 12, 2009 (UTC)

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 20:52, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 21:54, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:00, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) I have seen the light. ~ SavageBob 18:07, November 8, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Jinzler 19:33, November 10, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Grunny:
 * 2) * "although they had yet to defy Krayt and his Empire." This seems a bit redundant considering the previous sentence. Could you either cut it or reword it so it's less redundant? Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:12, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Cut. Thanks for the review, Grunny. :)--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:09, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * "Approximately one millennium after being founded, during the war between the Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Krayt's Sith Empire, deposed Emperor Roan Fel's Empire-in-exile, and the remnants of the Galactic Alliance, the Disciples of Twilight had yet to choose a side." <-- This doesn't flow well in the intro and kind of just sticks out. Particularly the "had yet to choose a side" part, which needs to flow a little better with the information. Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:04, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Please try it now.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:32, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Star Wars: The Essential Atlas Online Companion provides a sector placement for the moon Dyspeth. You should add this to the article. --Eyrezer 09:18, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *Could you take a look at it?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:55, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **I was actually meaning to add the sector placement to the text, but my explanation wasn't very clear. I've changed it to what I had in mind. While the Atlas Companion adds info relevant to the article, as it does not actually mention the Disciples it does not get placed in the Sources section, only in the relevant footnote. Does that make sense? Finally, we don't normally reference the release date, so I removed that reference too. --Eyrezer 20:52, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Thanks, I'll keep that in mind.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:10, October 28, 2009 (UTC)

Comments


 * Alright, I added a "N&R" section, due to a couple new sources. Also added said sources to relative section.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:00, October 27, 2009 (UTC)