Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified musical composition (LoBue Cantina)


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Unidentified musical composition (LoBue Cantina)

 * Nominated by:  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:13, July 3, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

(2 ECs/0 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 03:43, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) Menkooroo 13:17, July 12, 2011 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Axinal
 * 2) * Before I give a more thorough review, I think you ought to reread the article and fix up some of the run-on sentences, punctuation, and overall general grammar. For example, I'm sure the comma following 9 ABY was intended to be a period, but the sentence after that is entirely too long. I suggest cutting it down and then proofreading the entire article for other run-ons and punctuation errors.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 19:31, July 3, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) **Better?-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  19:49, July 3, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) *** Much better, thank you. My only other problem is with the title, which I find to be a little too generic. What do you think about moving the page to Unidentified musical composition (Lobue Cantina)?
 * 5) ****I moved it to Unidentified musical composition (LoBue Cantina). (It is called LoBue in the book.)-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:18, July 3, 2011 (UTC)
 * 6) *****Yeah, my mistake. Nice work!&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 03:43, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) Women-kooroo
 * 8) * Why is Han called a former General? He's still a Captain at this time.
 * 9) **Oops! Fixed...-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  15:20, July 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 10) * "A piece of music was played from a recording" seems a little grammatically awkward. Can you reword it to be a little cleaner? Menkooroo 15:14, July 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 11) **Better?-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  15:20, July 10, 2011 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just a little something I found while reading Heir to the Empire.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:13, July 3, 2011 (UTC)