Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Master Satele's holocron


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Master Satele's holocron

 * Nominated by: Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:01, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Project Hero. ~213 words, but the BTS is more than half of that.

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash; DigiFluid(Whine here) 20:15, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
 * 2)  501st  dogma ( talk ) 21:31, February 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash; 16:09, February 28, 2013 (UTC)

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 * A couple of things I see at first glance (which I'd just fix myself, but hey, it's your CAN):
 * Holocron is linked twice
 * Blarg. The move from Satele Shan's holocron to Master Satele's holocron screwed up the structure of everything.
 * "the Jedi Master known as the Hero of Tython after the Jedi's defeat of the Empire's Sith Emperor" comes across as redundant. Twice, ironically enough.
 * Eh, fixed.
 * Grammatical goof in the first line of BTS: "Master Satele's holocron first appeared as in the video game..."
 * Fixed.
 * BTS: "However, as the Jedi Knight is a Republic character and therefore is assumed to only choose the moral light side options" &mdash; preachy value judgement, not neutral POV.
 * Removed the "moral." Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:41, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
 * Otherwise I don't think there's really anything wrong with it. &mdash; DigiFluid(Whine here) 17:30, February 26, 2013 (UTC)
 * Please source the era in the infobox.&mdash; 04:55, February 28, 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 16:02, February 28, 2013 (UTC)

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