Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tott Doneeta


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Tott Doneeta
Support Objections Comments
 * 1) Jagged Fel,  (Yo!)[[Image:JagFel.jpg|20px]]
 * 2) Well written, informative, not a stub, my vote. 23:31, 26 January 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) .  .  .  .  08:17, 27 January 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) [[Image: Sithlogo.jpg|25px]] Admiral Arm-Ja Scobal, Dark Lord of the Sith (Guestbook) 22:36, 27 January 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) -- IG-Prime (IG-2000)[[Image:Arakyd Industries.jpg|17px]] 21:32, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Very well written and well maintained. It's got my vote. Greyman 22:42, 22 February 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 02:02, 27 January 2007 (UTC) - First, clear out the redlinks. We've been pretty good about having almost all of the new FAs having no redlinks, no reason this shouldn't get the same treatment. Secondly, expand the intro. It's far too short. With the info in the article it should be easy to write a good leader into the main article. Thirdly, least important but I think still warranted, it needs some quotes. A leader quote is essential, and quotes for the different sections if at all possible.
 * Redlinks were my fault. When I copied the article into Word for proofreading, I forgot all of the links. They are all fixed now. 06:11, 27 January 2007 (UTC)
 * I added a leader quote and added to the intro. But Tott Doneeta really has practically nothing to say. The Leader quote was the best I could find and its still a little rubbish... Jagged Fel,  (Yo!)[[Image:JagFel.jpg|20px]]
 * Nice job on the quotes. I knew you weren't going to get many, but even one helps the article. As for the intro, still way too small. Three sentences just doesn't cut it. Cull Tremayne 01:58, 28 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Nice job on expanding, but the intro now reads like a play-by-play. "On this date he went here. On this other date he learned how to do something. On another date he helped someone. On this final date he also learned something new." It needs to read more like an overview of the upcoming article than a point by point summary of his actions. Cull Tremayne
 * Rewrote intro, so it doesn't act as play-by-play. Expanded and removed some unimportant info. 19:29, 30 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Cull; generalized prose issues (Rule 1). Please reference my comments on the Inquistorious page.  - breathesgelatin Talk 20:05, 18 March 2007 (UTC)
 * Is there a way you can clean up some of the pictures? Perhaps edit out the speech boxes or crop them better? They look woefully terrible as it is. Cull Tremayne 01:58, 28 January 2007 (UTC)
 * Which one(s)? I mean I think most of them look ok. Hows the introduction now? If its still not long enough or is wrong in some way, you'll have to be more specific... Jagged Fel,  (Yo!)[[Image:JagFel.jpg|20px]]
 * It's definitely better, still needs some work. The images I am referring to are here, here, here, and here. The second image just needs the dialogue box just cut off the top. I can live with the second one, though the huge white space on his forehead makes it pretty ugly to look at. The third one just needs some hole patching or a side-crop. The white space draws our attention away from the pic. The last one just looks ugly. It's not good quality, doesn't show Tott that well, and is a compilation of shots. I think either a new version needs to be uploaded, or the dialogue put back in. Wasn't there a discussion about keeping the dialogue and not editing it out? Cull Tremayne 21:27, 28 January 2007 (UTC)
 * In line with the new rules, this article needs to cite its sources. QuentinGeorge 06:21, 7 February 2007 (UTC)