Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jiivahar


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Jiivahar

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 23:13, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The Jiivahar are an arboreal species: they look like some kind of frog/lizard but are actually simians...

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) J on the good path... --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:24, March 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 07:53, March 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) I think the artist did that infobox image in about 10 seconds. But good job. ~ SavageBob 17:54, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:33, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:21, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6)  Grunny  ( talk ) 03:37, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7)  CC7567  (talk) 06:03, April 30, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy and let's face the Challenge
 * 2) * Bio: They averaged 1.55 – 1.85 meters tall, an average size Can you replace one "average" with a synonym to avoid using the same word twice in a row?
 * 3) **Changed.
 * 4) * Bio: an average size for a humanoid species. Do you mean they were a humanoid species? If so, could you explicitly say it? ("a humanoid species like them").
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Bio: more fragile. susceptible to physical damage. Full-stop plus lower-case. Probably some text missing?
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) * Social structure: A talin is a community of 5-10 families but, how big is a family? Do they have big litters?
 * 9) **Unfortunately, no info on this.
 * 10) * Social structure: "to give as goods as they were could to the leaders". Eh... uh... Do you think maybe this could be reworded? Please? It might be just me, but I find it very confusing.
 * 11) **A word missing. Fixed.
 * 12) * In the galaxy: I don't think the link pathfinder leads to a popular Jiivahar job
 * 13) **Fixed
 * 14) * As per Alien Encounters, page 77, the sarvin can also be used to firmly grab living beings, which should be mentioned.
 * 15) **Added.
 * 16) * The guy in the infobox picture seems to wear jewelry in his (her?) left ankle, three rings in toes of the left foot and two more in neck piercings. This use of jewelry should be mentioned, particularly the piercing stuff for a species that cannot withstand physical damage.
 * 17) **I already have this info in the Society and culture section. I suspect you must have missed it.
 * 18) *Good job! Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:45, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 05:31, March 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 21) * Can we get a summary of their game stats? What stats do they get bonuses to and which ones do they get penalties on? That sort of thing. ~ SavageBob 03:59, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) **Do you mean in the Bts? --Eyrezer 04:55, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Yeah, I've done it on a few entries. I think Pacithhip is an example. ~ SavageBob 05:13, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) ****How's this? --Eyrezer 06:57, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) *****Looks good! ~ SavageBob 17:54, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) In the intro, you say that they were a hairless simian species, while in the body you say that they were evolved from such a species. All I got.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:52, April 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) *Harmonised. --Eyrezer 08:28, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) Toprawa:
 * 29) * Should this be "talins" rather than "talin" singular? "Their decisions could not be forced on their talin"
 * 30) * Not an objection, but I made a few minor changes regarding each mention of the Kinn-taas to correct what I perceived as a singular-plural inconsistency. Feel free to revise that if I am incorrect. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:19, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) **Re talin, I intended it to be singular, as in "The leader(s) of a talin (tribe) cannot force a decision on the tribe."
 * 32) **The source has "During these feasts, or Kinn-taas, all members of a talin..." so it doesn't actually indicate what the singular is. --Eyrezer 21:41, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) ***Ok, change my edits around to your liking if you want. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:21, April 25, 2010 (UTC)

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