User talk:Master Jonathan

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The Father
Hi there Jonathan! Hey, I just wanted to know if you could check this out. I'm working to make it an FA, and since I heard that you specialize in doing copy-edits, I thought it'd be a good idea to ask for your help. Just, I want to let you know that I will not be able to address your objections/suggestions in some time. Hope you can help me, and have a nice day!! Plagueis327 22:48, January 22, 2012 (UTC)


 * I'll be happy to take a look at it when I can, probably tomorrow as I may not get to it tonight. Master Jonathan Holocomm Monday, January 23, 2012, 02:21 UTC


 * Ok, thx!!!!!!!!!!!! :D Plagueis327 16:37, January 23, 2012 (UTC)


 * Alright, I just began to take a look at it, but there are several major problems that are preventing me from proceeding further at this time:
 * The article has significant problems with overlinking. Per Manual_of_Style, each article should be linked only once in each of the infobox, intro, and article, upon first mention in each. I removed a dozen duplicate links in the intro alone; the rest of the article has the same problem.
 * Please note that the plural of "Jedi" is "Jedi", not "Jedis".
 * "Upon discovering this, the Father decided that if there was going to be balance, Anakin needed to forget what he saw, and then proceeded to take him back to his monastery" Say what? Who proceeded to take who back to whose monastery? And if Anakin needed to forget it, what did the Father do about it? (Simply linking to memory rub doesn't cut it, as links don't show up on the printable version). Also, please read through the article one more time to look for any other sentences that don't quite make sense (there may or may not be any, but I want you to look anyway).
 * Watch your run-on sentences. I already broke up one in the intro, and there's a couple more further down that should be broken up as well.
 * With the Jedi, you use a mix of first and last names, which is incorrect, as first names alone should never be used except where multiple characters have the same last name, which isn't the case here.
 * I'm willing to help you out here, but my job is to help polish the article up, not to correct every major problem wrong with it, which is your job. Let me know when you've cleaned this stuff up and I'll take another look at it. Master Jonathan (Training Room) Monday, January 23, 2012, 18:35 UTC


 * Ok, I've resolved the "Jedis" typo. And I'll keep addressing your objections. Plagueis327 00:08, January 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * I have another question. Should I then name the three Jedi by their whole names every time I mention them? Like Anakin Skywalker instead of Anakin or Skywalker, Obi-Wan Kenobi instead of Kenobi or Obi-Wan and Ahsoka Tano instead of Tano? Plagueis327 00:23, January 24, 2012 (UTC)


 * Generally, full name should be used on first mention in each of the intro and body, and last name only thereafter. Also, please note that you should never strike another person's objection, as you did above; it is up to that person to strike it themselves if they feel it is properly addressed. This goes for the actual nomination pages too (don't worry, it's a common newbie error). On another note, why did you do this? Master Jon (Council Chambers) Tuesday, January 24, 2012, 01:27 UTC


 * Thought I should re-write the "Personality and Traits" section :P Plagueis327 02:24, January 25, 2012 (UTC)


 * OK, rewriting it is fine, but what I saw was the complete removal of several paragraphs that had a lot of valid information in it. Make sure you integrate that information back in when you rewrite it. Master Jon Training Room Wednesday, January 25, 2012, 02:32 UTC


 * Okay, I've followed your advice much as I could. Please check the article again and tell me if I need to do something else. Anyway, thank you for your assistance, it was quite helpful!!!!!!!! :) Plagueis327 20:14, February 6, 2012 (UTC)


 * I'm not seeing any improvement here. There are still significant overlinking issues in the body of the article; I count five links to Mortis Monastery and six to The galaxy. Many other articles are linked way too many times. Furthermore, no attempt was made to address the third or final objections above; in fact, you did the opposite on the last one, changing several last names to first names. I will look at the article again when an actual attempt is made to address my objections. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Council Chambers</b> Tuesday, February 7, 2012, 05:33 UTC


 * Okay, I'll work harder!! :D Plagueis327 14:41, February 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * Well, I've erased many of those overlinking issues, and I'll get to work with the names later :P Plagueis327 15:10, February 7, 2012 (UTC)


 * Now it's underlinked. Articles linked in the intro (prior to the first ==header==) should be linked again in the body (after the first ==header==). Master Jonathan</b> War Room</b> Wednesday, February 8, 2012, 00:44 UTC


 * I think it is done. Plagueis327 03:33, February 8, 2012 (UTC)


 * OK, linking looks fine now. Take care of the other two objections and I'll take another shot at copy-editing this thing. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Training Room</b> Wednesday, February 8, 2012, 04:56 UTC


 * Thank you for the help, I'll keep working!!!!!!! :D Plagueis327 15:22, February 8, 2012 (UTC)

Re: Planet infobox
My mistake; thanks for the heads-up.  CC7567  (talk) 06:15, February 7, 2012 (UTC)

Darkstaff
Hi Master Jonathan, I was wondering if you would be willing to copy-edit the Darkstaff article for me? Thank you. --Jinzler 20:07, February 11, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> War Room</b> Monday, February 13, 2012, 03:22 UTC
 * Thank you! --Jinzler 16:34, February 13, 2012 (UTC)

Timeline videos
My apologies on removing the italics from the Timeline articles, hope it wasn't too much work to fix them. However, I would like to know why some publisher summaries are in italics and others are not, and also why some of the Timeline's have a Publisher's Summary heading while others have Plot or Synopsis headings.--This is my custom signature 01:56, February 15, 2012 (UTC)


 * Re-adding the italics was as simple as hitting the "undo" button on your edits, so no problem there. :) As for your question, publisher's summaries should always be in italics, while plot summaries written in our own words should not. Only the first twelve Timeline videos have actually been released, so we only have full publisher's summaries for those twelve. However, I now see that the "plots" on the other seven were lifted directly from their brief descriptions on the Timeline page, so I will be changing those to italicized publisher's summaries in a few minutes. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> War Room</b> Wednesday, February 15, 2012, 02:03 UTC

Bulduga
Could you give Bulduga a copy-edit?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 12:33, February 23, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. Let me know if you have any questions. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Council Chambers</b> Thursday, February 23, 2012, 18:39 UTC


 * Thanks a lot.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 08:43, February 24, 2012 (UTC)

Taggart
Yes, it's me again. Could you give Taggart (Senate Guard) a copy-edit? By the way, is the current quote correct? (I'm unsure about the [sic!].)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 13:39, February 26, 2012 (UTC)


 * Done. I removed the [sic], since that's only for unintentional spelling and grammar errors. Calling a female officer "sir" is not a grammar error, but rather a matter of decorum, so it doesn't get a [sic]. Let me know if you have any other questions. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Comlink</b> Sunday, February 26, 2012, 18:39 UTC


 * Ah, I understand. Thank you very much again, Jon.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:48, February 28, 2012 (UTC)

Wookieepedia at Celebration VI
Thanks! :D After missing the deadline two years ago, I didn't want us to miss out on it again this year. As for Wedge, well, it would have been a crying shame if that nom went down in flames after all that work, and I didn't want to see that happen, especially after all the work I put into my own review of the article. :) &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Training Room</b> Tuesday, February 28, 2012, 17:57 UTC

Awesome job!
MasterFred <sup style="color:green">(Whatever) 21:33, March 5, 2012 (UTC)