Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/CorusMall


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

CorusMall

 * Nominated by: Alexrd 13:04, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Ready for some shopping at the mall? Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 22:06, April 11, 2012 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The Premier
 * 2) A few prelims:
 * 3) The second listing of the video game under the Sources section is not necessary and can be removed.
 * 4) Please add the date of the game to the BTS.
 * 5) Since the article is not sectioned, you can add  to hide the table of contents.
 * 6) Please spell out in the BTS that the mission completely contradicts the movie, since we see the Queen leave directly from the landing pad and goes to the Senate, instead of being captured. And you might need the "twoconflicting" tag.
 * 7) That's it for the moment. Hope to see more from you, Alexrd. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 13:38, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * Suggested changes made. Alexrd 14:08, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 1) Okay, you need to replace the infobox with the new version.
 * 2) *All you need to do is load a new structure infobox from the standard preload box, which is below the edit screen, and then just copy/paste (carefully) the info to the new one. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 15:18, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) The use of "this" in the second sentence implies an OOU viewpoint we try to avoid. Could you replace it with "the" or another word.
 * 4) Weren't the mercenaries identified as being part of the Sun Guard? If so, please add context.
 * 5) Context on chokie (that is, food and not a collectible). Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 16:13, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) *I'm just suggesting that you specify its a food item. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 15:18, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 7) Also, context for High Galactic Alphabet in the BTS.
 * 8) *I placed this objection so the reader could understand why it is important the High Galactic Alphabet is used and not Aurebesh. If you feel the difference is not important, then the sentence can just be removed.
 * 9) Looks like I spoke too soon. Once these objections are taken care of, the article will be over 200 words and will need sectioned per the layout guide: intro, description, and history. If it goes over 250 words, it can be taken to the GAN page instead.
 * 10) Thus ends round 2. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 16:13, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 11) * Points 2 and 3 done, and fixed some links. However, I'm not sure what context is needed for chokie (the article doesn't imply that it's a collectible) and High Galactic Alphabet. And I'm not familiar with a new version of the infobox. Could you help me out? Alexrd 10:31, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 12) **See above for my tips. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 15:18, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 13) *All done. I think I haven't missed anything. Thanks for the help. Alexrd 18:02, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 14) Very good job, and its still under 250! One more thing though, per the LG, thinks must be linked in both the intro and the body. After you sectioned off the article, Coruscant and Roona are no longer linked in the body. Please find a place for those links in the body. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 19:41, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * Done. Alexrd 21:57, April 11, 2012 (UTC)


 * 1) The deputy premier
 * 2) *What's important to remember about intros is that they aren't a prologue to the rest of the article --- they're an abstract of the article, and everything established in the intro needs to be established in the article as well. Currently, the "History" section reads as if it's building on what's been said in the intro. It mentions "the Roonans," which is confusing without the context that CorusMall is run by Roonan Traders, and it doesn't state that Corusmall is a trade center. Those facts are in the intro, but they need to be established in the article body as well.
 * 3) *An important thing to remember about image captions: Only use punctuation at the end if it's a complete sentence. Normally, this would fall under what we call the clause, but I'll leave it to you so that you always remember in the future. :)
 * 4) *Does this actually contradict the movie? For all we know, a million different things could have happened in between the scenes that we see. This kinda seems more like an Expanded Universe tale of something happening offscreen during the movie rather than a contradiction, similar to books like Tales from Jabba's Palace. Does that make sense? Menkooroo 01:07, May 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * 5) ** Intro and History sections fixed. Regarding the caption, isn't that a complete sentence? And regarding the events, they do contradict the movie since we see in TPM, Amidala entering the air taxi safely with Panaka, Anakin, Jar Jar and the rest. In the game, the air taxi is destroyed. Alexrd 19:35, May 18, 2012 (UTC)


 * 1) Exiled Jedi
 * 2) *Please expand the introduction.
 * 3) *If the Roonan traders have uniques quotes then they are unique enough to each have their own article. The owner should definitely have his own article.
 * 4) *Any quotes from the traders?
 * 5) *You need to source the article since you have more than one source.
 * 6) *After finishing all of the objections here the article will likely need to go to the GAN page.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  13:04, May 21, 2012 (UTC)
 * 7) **I don't see how I can expand the introduction without repeating information from the rest of the article.
 * 8) ***The introduction is supposed to summarize the body of the article, so repeating things is okay.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:14, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 9) **Maybe, but is it necessary for the nomination of this article?
 * 10) ***Since they work at the mall I believe that they are an important part of the CorusMall article.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:14, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 11) **Not about CorusMall itself. But I'll see if I can get one.
 * 12) **The only source is the video game (which I've been told it wasn't necessary to repeat from the Appearances section). The Strategy Guide also describes the same events, so I felt it could be present in the Sources section too. Alexrd 20:59, May 22, 2012 (UTC)
 * 13) ***If you have two sources/appearances then you need to source the article. It does not matter if you only have one of each, they count when checking to see if you need to source the article.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:14, May 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 14) *Could you mention what is in the glass cases?-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:14, May 23, 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Not an objection, but is it worth it creating articles for any of the Roonan traders? Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 16:13, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2) * I don't think so, for now. In my opinion they are not relevant enough to the events of the game. Alexrd 10:31, April 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) **Just a thought; it's true that they're not relevant to the game but if they have quotes and are unique individuals, it's extra "flavor," as I like to say. Corellian PremierRobotech.jpg along the watchtower 15:18, April 11, 2012 (UTC)