Talk:Ni'Korish (faction)

Phrasing
Just wondering about the phrasing in the second paragraph. It reads "All attempts were thwarted except the last one", which killed Teneniel Djo. Something seems off about this -- I mean, if there was more than one attempt, and she eventually died, then by definition they all failed except for the last one, and we hardly need to say so. (Unless, specifically, they were thwarted by the Queen's security, rather than happening to fail. And I don't know my Hapan history well enough to say.) I'm wondering if there's a way to make it a bit more elegant. AnneA 04:14, December 11, 2009 (UTC)