Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Bane Malar


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Bane Malar

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:41, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: WTS is back, and this time... it's for money.

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Well, that was pronto. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:12, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) ~ SavageBob 07:31, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 03:32, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Graestan ( Talk ) 14:27, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Cool character, but far from the coolest Bane ever.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:15, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) —Tommy  9281 00:14, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Just one little tense tweak. Otherwise, very clean. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:02, May 25, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farlstendoiro and the potential Draethos guy
 * 2) * Bio: Was his telepathy a natural trait, or a developed skill? (Probably no source specifies, but just in case)
 * 3) **Natural, which has been added.
 * 4) * Kessel: "his was greatly feared". His what? Or maybe he was?
 * 5) **He was. Fixed.
 * 6) * Corellia: "The only was to remove the droids from the Meatlumps' hideout was to destroy them all" Words missing or something else. Please reword the sentence.
 * 7) **Typo. "The only way"
 * 8) * Tatooine: "Skywalker would somehow cause his death" You mean Malar's death? I initially thought you meant Jabba's death. Suggestion: Specify?
 * 9) **Malar's. Specified.
 * 10) * Tatooine: "The job botched" How was the job botched? We only know Malar had predicted his own death by connecting with Skywalker or something. Was Malar intimidated by this fact?
 * 11) **Reworded.
 * 12) * BTS: Can you mention that SWCCG was released by Decipher, Inc.? Just to avoid any confusion with WotC's SWTCG. Also, when mentioning SWGTCG
 * 13) **Specified.
 * 14) *Insert formula here ·:P Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:03, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Thanks muchly. Thefourdotelipsis 15:09, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 17) *Just a few of things:
 * 18) ** First, "those he returned to confinement were usually haunted by him for a considerable amount of time afterward." I think you mean they were haunted by the memory of him, not Malar himself, but this is Star Wars, where spirits and ghosts and things exist, so it's probably best to clarify.
 * 19) ***Good point. Fixed.
 * 20) **S econd, "Although the character of Bane Malar is believed to have appeared in Star Wars Episode VI: Return of the Jedi . . . ." Can you rephrase this to be active voice? Who thinks he appeared in ROTJ? If it's the DB entry, just say, "Although the DataBank entry on him claims he appeared in ROTJ..."
 * 21) ***Right you are. Fixed.
 * 22) ** No mention of him in Star Wars Chronicles or Behind the Magic? That's it! The rest is solid. ~ SavageBob 16:18, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ***That I do not know. I'll look into it. Thefourdotelipsis 01:37, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) ****Don't worry about it. I SOFIXIT'ed it by checking myself, and there doesn't appear to be any trace of him in either source. Nice article, BTW. ~ SavageBob 07:31, April 24, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Added CUSWE link for you.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:06, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * No CSWE entry or Chronicles appearance? --Eyrezer 03:32, April 28, 2010 (UTC)