Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Coruscant Security Force/Legends (second nomination)

Coruscant Security Force

 * Nominated by: Coruscantfan 03:33, July 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Second attempt

Support

 * 1) Good work.-- 02:07, July 10, 2010 (UTC)

It's on me&hellip;

 * Overall:
 * Once you cite something, you don't have to repeatedly cite it as you did the first time. For example, once you do this don't keep doing that. Rather, do this  for every other time you cite a source or appearance. Please correct this throughout the article.
 * Well, does it really matter? I ask because it wouldn't change how the article looks or reads. It does the same thing either way that enter the code. And I would prefer not to change something like that if I don't have to. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * I understand your point, I don't think this is one of those musts if you will. I'll strike this, but don't be surprised if an Inq takes issue with this.-- 01:50, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * We'll see I guess. Thanks. Coruscantfan 03:01, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Check for over/underlinking. I've done some for you. Don't worry about this, it's a problem with me, too.
 * Checked it, I don't see anymore linking problems. If you still find them, go ahead and fix them. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Intro:
 * Context for Coruscant, what I'm looking for is galactic capital.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 13:13, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Context for Darth Maul.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Context for Darth Cadeus, ie, he was a Sith Lord, or a Chief of State, both are not needed.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Responsibilities:
 * Again, context for Coruscant.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 13:13, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * TGR:
 * For the fourth paragraph, is there a particular year when this happened?
 * Done. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * TNR:
 * Context for Luke Skywalker and Mara Jade, and Leia Organa Solo.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * TGA:
 * Context for Lumiya and Alema Rar.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Establish that Solo not only became Chief of State, but also a Sith Lord.
 * Done. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * You might want to consider adding a few more details to the BTS, such as inclusion in the CSWE, etc.
 * Well, there isn't much to say. The CSWE entry isn't that impressive or noteworthy. In researching this topic I'm surprised at how little information there is compiled in one place. For an organization that plays a vital role in several places, its as if it doesn't even exist. The Star Wars databank doesn't have an entry and the CSWE entry is pathetic compared with all the information that I've been able to find. Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * The mention in the CSWE is what I was looking for, since I do that. However, this falls under user preference, since there are many FAs that do not list the CSWE in the BTS.-- 01:59, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * It looks very good, and I'm impressed with the research you put into this. Overall, the main problem I'm seeing is context for individuals and what not. If you have any questions, don't be afraid to ask.-- 18:01, July 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks Coruscantfan 19:14, July 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Just be ready to update the article for any future sources/appearances. That is your responsibility as nominator, and I'm sure, when you promote this successfully to FA status, you don't want it to be removed down the road. Looking forward to reviewing your next nom.-- 02:07, July 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * No problem, I'm planning on doing that! Thanks for your help and your vote. Coruscantfan 03:01, July 10, 2010 (UTC)

Quick preliminary

 * The BTS is confusing. Did Betrayal establish that the stormtroopers being attacked in ROTJ were part of the CSF? If not, that needs a source. If that is so, it needs to be rephrased, because it's kinda confusing as is.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:24, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. Coruscantfan 16:55, July 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * "This however, caused some confusion as the Coruscant Guard was the canon-established police force during the Imperial era but they were not shown in Return of the Jedi. It was assumed that stormtroopers stationed on Coruscant (including the ones shown in Return of the Jedi) simply were assigned to CSF and assisted guard units in police duties" This needs to be sourced. However, I'd suggest simply saying "The CSF first appeared in ROTJ SE, although this appearance was in the form of stormtroopers being attacked. Betrayal later confirmed that stormtroopers stationed on Coruscant simply were assigned to CSF and assisted guard units in police duties." or something similar. it just needs to be phrased to avoid speculation, and that sorta stuff.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:15, July 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. Coruscantfan 23:26, July 21, 2010 (UTC)

Chick Gandil

 * For now, please fix the image placing in the article. Images should alternate right to left, beginning with the infobox image. Also, please also change any image caption that are close to IU description. And before I completely review the article, you need to make sure the entire article is properly sourced and free of any speculation/OR. Sentences like this: "In 22 BBY, the initiation of the Clone Wars brought changes to how the capital was policed. Police droids were used extensively as regular patrol units and were usually one of the first responders to situations." is speculation/OR, unless it's said in a source.  JangFett  (Talk) 15:44, August 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks, just a few comments/questions... Images: They were alternating but a previous FA reviewer moved the 2nd and 3rd images and I can't find anywhere where the placement of pictures is dictated, so is that just tradition? Cause otherwise, I'm not seeing a problem with that and what happens when the next reviewer changes it back? So if there is no written guideline, I'd rather leave it cause it looks/reads better. Captions: If you could please be specific in what image captions you have a problem with because I'm not seeing where there is a problem when comparing the captions with the captions of other FA articles. I'm happy to make the adjustment, just let me know specifically where. Speculation: That sentence along with the rest of the paragraph is all sourced from the same source which is listed at the end of the paragraph. Police droids are first used during the Clone Wars and performed those duties based on the listed source. If you see other sentences you think are speculation please be specific because at this point I've sourced everything I think might be taken as speculation. Asking me to check the whole article for that (which I've done) doesn't help me fix problems. By the way, your reference to Chick Gandil made me laugh, that's funny ;) Coruscantfan 03:47, August 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * I made adjustments to the pictures, does that look better? However my question still stands on the tradition/guidelines that have to do with pictures.Coruscantfan 02:05, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * If I may answer for Jang, you can see here that it says to alternate images.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:53, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah, ok, good to know. I looked but couldn't find it. Somehow I missed that. Thanks! Coruscantfan 17:46, August 7, 2010 (UTC)

Chack

 * "It was renamed the Anti-Terrorist Unit during the Galactic Alliance." You mean the Anti-Terrorism Unit, right? If so, I'd suggest changing "it" to "the latter."  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:13, August 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. Coruscantfan 17:43, August 7, 2010 (UTC)

ZatoichiVendetta

 * I believe the subject of this article plays minor role in Shadows of Coruscant, an adventure outlined towards the end of the original Wizards of the Coast Roleplaying Game Core Rulebook. SinisterSamurai 06:51, August 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Ok, well, I'm not really sure what your objection is. I did make sure it was listed under the appearance section. Was that the problem?Coruscantfan 15:56, August 9, 2010 (UTC)