Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tera Sinube


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Tera Sinube

 * Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 18:26, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It is with great pleasure that I present to you my first guest nom for WP:TCW.

(5 Inqs/4 Users/9 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:46, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Pre-nom reviewed. Cylka  -talk- 19:34, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) I was wondering when this was going to be posted. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:42, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) I'm cool with Jedi Columbo.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:47, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Has earned my retconiffic approval stamp.  CC7567  (talk) 05:01, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Excellent work, Tommy. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 13:57, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Excellent work as usual.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 20:50, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 02:34, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) More TCW from you, please. :-) -- 1358  (Talk) 13:54, April 23, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Lee attacks
 * 2) * Just one thing: In the bio you say he was an elderly Cosian. He wasn't elderly all time, so please rephrase. Otherwise great work.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:38, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **He was already old by the time he's introduced into the series, and all of the sources refer to him as an old guy, so that's how the article is written. Please let me know if that is acceptable, and thanks very much for the review. —Tommy 9281 18:42, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Allright.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:46, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) "Tera Sinube was an elderly male Cosian": this is not kosher, unless you add some mention of when he was considered elderly (i.e. by the time of the Clone Wars). --Imperialles 18:55, April 20, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Thanks to all those who gave good copyedits to this article. —Tommy 9281 18:26, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * It's not an objection cause I don't intend to follow it up, but from reading the first couple of bio sections, it's very play-by-play and reads like a summary of the episode. The first half of the "Meeting Ashoka Tano" could probably be written in two succinct sentences, for example, and as it is it's written with Ashoka as the subject and Sinube as the object. Like I said, it's certainly not an objection, but I feel compelled to point out this issue which I think greatly diminishes what is an otherwise excellently-written article. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:47, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for the suggestion and the review. I will work on rearranging and clipping a few things. —Tommy 9281 18:40, April 21, 2010 (UTC)