Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Ord Pardron sector defense outpost


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Ord Pardron sector defense outpost

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 14:03, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Thrawny goodness.

(5 ACs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Very good.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 21:56, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Well done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:40, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:38, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:43, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:46, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) LtNOWIS 20:41, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  CC7567  (talk) 20:40, December 24, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 2) * You appear to give two different dates for the Empire abandoning it. Intro and description say 0 BBY, history says 1 BBY.
 * 3) **Changed to 1 BBY. Leftover from an earlier revision that I mixed dates up in. Nice catch.
 * 4) * "the Ukio system&mdash;a major agricultural world in the Abrion sector" A system can't be a world. Can you rephrase that? Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:49, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Changed to the "planet Ukio". - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 18:03, December 23, 2009 (UTC)

Comments


 * Could you cut down the intro a bit? It's quite long if you compare it to the body. -- Xd1358  Talk 08:25, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * I tried cutting it down, but I believe that removing anything would cause the intro to lose cohesion, which in turn may lead to further objections down the line. I agree that it is a little large, but its not fluff; if you think you can spot a line or two that can be trimmed out without harming the intro, let me know. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 18:03, December 23, 2009 (UTC)