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Derek Klivian

 * Nomination by: - Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My other summer nom. Image replacement by Red is ongoing. Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/0 users/2 total)
Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 00:22, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Hugetastic. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:24, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * The SOTE section doesn't seem to mention Klivian specifically at all. Does something specifically say he was present there? There seems to be a few areas where you mention the Rogues as a group and not Klivian as an individual, and the same question applies. If he's not, then I think it might be just a bit too much of a stretch, especially when you're committing that level of detail. "Organa" is rather abruptly re-introduced in the Mission to Mrlsst section - this should probably be tweaked. And I'm counting 5 redlinks. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Redlinks reduced within acceptable limits. Leia reintroduced. The Rogues thing is a general "We know he was in the squadron at this time, we know the full squadron was here, ergo he was here, though we'll keep it fairly generic." Havac 04:51, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Right. I get what you're saying, but since nothing is explicitly stating that he was there, I think that at least the SOTE section could but cut down. Thefourdotelipsis 23:43, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just a suggestion: Couldn't you get some better images for the Darklighter section? At the moment, it's just various headshots of him, or him lying in bed...I think that panels of him actually doing something would illustrate the article much better. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)

Kopecz

 * Nominated by: -- Darth Xadún 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: The natural counterpart to Kas'im. Again, WP:NSW

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 05:35, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 12:37, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 13:58, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) It's likely missing info from the Official Star Wars Fact File in relation to his early life. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:15, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Neither my partner or I has access to the fact file, so if you can provide it, we'd both be greatly appreciative. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 14:41, 10 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **I don't either, unfortunately; you might want to ask Jaymach or Cav or anyone else with access to them. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:16, 15 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***After obtaining the Fact File, it has been determined that there is no new info. It says pretty much the same things as PoD does. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 13:56, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Fair enough. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:58, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 7) * The Quote attribution is a little unclear in "The Brotherhood of Darkness" section.
 * 8) **Addressed.
 * 9) * The opening paragraph of the bio needs a bit more context. When did he live, what species he was, what his homeworld was etc. It starts off with him leaving the Jedi Order but it should start with him leaving Ryloth and becoming a Jedi in the first place.
 * 10) **Addressed, I believe.
 * 11) * "attempting to establish a system with numerous Dark Lords" &mdash; bit of context on the significance of this, please. What was a Dark Lord and how was Kaan's approach different?
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * "Together, the three Sith planned the Battle of Korriban&mdash;after the Brotherhood re-took the ancient Sith homeworld..." &mdash; this also needs context and to be properly explained. As is it seems to be assuming the reader is already familiar with the information. They planned the battle; who actually fought in it? Did Kopecz? Re-took the Sith homeworld from whom? Etc.
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * "Kopecz, however, remained with Kaan to continue the war against the Galactic Republic." &mdash; again, context is needed here. This is the first mention of a war with the Republic, and if Kopecz is "continuing" the battle then he'd have to already been participating, but that's not been mentioned before in the bio. This stuff could easily go with the first paragraph.
 * 16) **I believe this too has been addressed through handling of previous objections.
 * 17) * The stuff about the Battle of Ulahore needs some changes; it's not presented in chronological order at present. The outcome of the battle isn't mentioned, either. I'm also not sure if the stuff about Bane establishing the Rule of Two at a later point is really appropriate, but it's up to you if you want to keep it.
 * 18) **That section talks about Ulabore (a person), not Ulahore. The battle mentioned at this point is at Phaseera. Also, I removed the bit about Bane and the RoT, which I agree, isn't really appropriate here.
 * 19) ***It's still not in chronological order.
 * 20) ****It should be good now.
 * 21) *"was like he had his teeth on their throats" -- please reword to read less colloquially.
 * 22) **Addressed.
 * 23) ***That doesn't really make any difference.
 * 24) ****It should be good now.
 * 25) *****I don't see any change. It still doesn't tell me what that actually means.
 * 26) * "Kopecz then mounted his flyer and took off for the battle, which seemed would result in a victory for the Sith." -- this reads awkwardly at best "which seemed would;" also, seemed to whom?
 * 27) **Addressed.
 * 28) * We jump from the third battle to the sixth quite suddenly. Some mention that the Sith and Republic remained in war for several battles/X amount of time would be prudent.
 * 29) **It should be good now.
 * 30) * "Following their defeat, Kopecz joined the remaining members of the Brotherhood in a network of caves at Kaan's order. He explained to Githany and Darovit that Kaan intended to use the thought bomb to defeat the Jedi, at which Githany chose to flee, taking Darovit with her." &mdash; again, this makes little to no sense for those who aren't familiar with the topic/source material. Who's Darovit? You've already mentioned Githany before but another mention of who she is wouldn't go amiss. What's a thought bomb, what's the significance of it, and why did Githany want to flee? Also, you need to mention Kopecz finding out about it before he tells anyone.
 * 31) **Addressed all points, I believe.
 * 32) ***Very good, but it's still a little hazy what exactly a thought bomb is.
 * 33) ****It should be good now.
 * 34) * "Kopecz was committed to joining Kaan and the others, swept up in Kaan's manipulation through the Force" needs some clarification.
 * 35) **Addressed.
 * 36) * The "Thought bomb" and "Last stand" sections are both extremely short and should be merged/resectioned.
 * 37) **Addressed.
 * 38) * Context on the defenders of the caves, please. Also, explain that the Seventh Battle of Ruusan is -- presumably -- the battle in the caves; it's not all that clear and jumps fairly suddenly. Farfalla's also introduced rather suddenly; please amend.
 * 39) **Addressed.
 * 40) * BtS: mention his appearance in PoD and how it expanded his backstory yada yada before moving on to the eye colour. Also, why is the Galactic Campaign Guide info not in the bio. It should be.
 * 41) **Decent read, but remember that you're writing a character biography, not a summary of the comics. Also note that the majority of the readers won't be familiar with the source material so explain and contextify things fully. Lastly, Bane has obviously never seen Orn Free Taa. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:58, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) ***I don't get the Orn Free Taa part, but the rest of the objection has been addressed. Thank you for the review, Ackbar. If anything else is required, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:27, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) Do we know which Fact File issue and article he is in? --Eyrezer 23:40, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) *Addressed.
 * 45) I think the paragraphs describing his leaving the cave with the Force bomb need to be reviewed for factual accuracy. --Eyrezer 23:40, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) *Addressed, I believe, while addressing Ackbar's comments above. Let me know if further maintenance is required, Eyrezer. Thank you. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:27, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 47) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 48) * Intro mentions that Farfalla recognized and tried to redeem him. Biography just says he refused to surrender.
 * 49) **Addessed.
 * 50) * "Comprehending that by this time the Jedi would have surrounded the caves&mdash;and that his death was not inevitable&mdash;Kopecz decided to join the Sith warriors who were ordered to defend the caves and fight with them." This took a couple of reads. How being surrounded by the enemy doesn't mean inevitable death could be clearer. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:09, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 51) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, GT. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:46, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Many thanks to Cavalier One for providing the Fact File for me. Like Xadún's others, I will be taking this one over as well in his absence. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 13:56, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Still working on outstanding objections. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 23:37, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

Raid on the Iziz Royal Palace

 * Nominated by: -- Tommy9281 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: Damsel in distress.

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) So that's where you've been lately...  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 23:42, 2 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the physics homework Chack Jadson is not doing right now:
 * 2) * Bit too much PBP in intro
 * 3) **Really? I left out maaad details in the intro. Care to assist? —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:48, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Just "As Ulic Qel-Droma stepped forward to offer the protection of both the Galactic Republic and the Jedi Order to the Queen". I feel that this could be rephrased a tad. I dislike the "stepped forward" bit.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:31, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * "For 400 years" Is this an exact date? if so, link.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * Your " seem to be off in the quotes (no spaces are necessary).
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * "Sounds of blaster fire could be heard in the background as Novar answered the comlink from the defense towers." A bit too flowery.
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) * "Ulic Qel-Droma arrived at that same moment with proud stories of how the Riders he had engaged in battle met their demise, but was quickly silenced by the sight a distressed Amanoa." I don't think this is necessary.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * "laughing ominously at the young, novice Jedi, awaiting their return." Same thing; I'd say this is unneeded.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) * "Veitch also used as the first official mission of his new characters Ulic and Cay Qel-Droma, and Tott Doneeta". Is a word missing?
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) *Very nice Tommy. You've come a long way. I'm impressed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:08, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Iziz Royal Palace.JPG and Image:PoorAmanoa.JPG are very low quality. Re-scan 'em. --Imperialles 10:20, 14 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Addressed the first one, working on the second one. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 12:45, 16 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **The second one has also been addressed. Many thanks to JMAS, for the clean images. If still unsatisfactory, Imp, please advise, and I'll rectify. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 01:11, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * The part where Jeth tells his apprentices of Onderon's history should be presented earlier in the piece, and not as something that Jeth speaks of, to remove that point of view aspect. Actually, that problem runs throughout the article, as you're telling this from the perspective of the Jedi. A more objective view would be desirable, where you wouldn't have to reveal what and who people are - just say who and what they are as soon as they appear. You should also talk about why Kira and Gobee are performing the raid, etc. Thefourdotelipsis 02:43, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ** Still working on this, Fourdot. Should be good now, Fourdot. Please advise if more is required. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:46, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***The problem still exists, since you "reveal" Kira and Gobee. "The Commandos, who were actually Beast-Lord Oron Kira and his second-in-command Gobee, easily dispatched the Protectors, and stormed the room where the Queen and her daughter were sequestered." - This should not be, and the characters should be introduced in the prelude section. Thefourdotelipsis 22:10, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ****Should be good now, Fourdot. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 08:49, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 8) *Conjectural title? Additionally, and this isn't really a steadfast objection, but it looks odd having the article title at "Raid on the Iziz Royal Palace" and the bolded bit reading "Royal Palace of Iziz." I'd suggest swapping the "Royal Palace of Iziz" with the "Iziz Royal Palace" later on in the sentence for consistency.
 * 9) **Conjecture tag added, sentence swapped around. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:18, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *In the intro, it should state that the Jedi were trailed, then fired upon by the Beast Riders in chronological order. Additionally, the "arrival" should be clarified to state where they arrived to, since the last thing mentioned was the peace negotiations, but they hadn't actually arrived there yet.
 * 11) **addressed.
 * 12) *The intro needs a bit of reworking. The article's about the raid on the palace, not the Jedi's role in everything; if anything, the POV should be leaning towards the Beast Riders. As is, it reads like a summary, and only really four lines of it describe the actual raid itself. Also, "the Queen demanded that Ulic Qel-Droma and his companions have the Princess returned to her&mdash;at once" seems a little dramatic.
 * 13) **Addressed, I believe.
 * 14) *The "background" section should really start with a date rather than the "for four hundred years." "Between [approximately] whenever and whenever" would probably be better.
 * 15) **Fixed. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:18, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *"As a test of their Jedi knighthood" reads a little awkwardly.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) *Per 4dot above on Jeth's brief. To be honest I don't think it's particularly relevant at all and would prefer to see it go completely, but if it has to stay it should be presented in chronological order.
 * 19) *"When the Nebulon Ranger entered the skies of Onderon, it was immediately set upon by what seemed to be a flock of giant birds flying in their path. After closer scrutiny, Tott Doneeta realized that what was thought to be birds were actually Beast Riders, determined on preventing the Jedi from reaching Iziz." Again, this is written completely from the POV of the Jedi and reads like a plot summary, which it shouldn't.
 * 20) **Addressed.
 * 21) *The Prelude section just reads like a summary of what's gone before the raid; while this is somewhat necessary and not a bad thing, there's no actual prelude for the raid itself. E.g. no planning, conception, nothing on the part of the Beast Riders.
 * 22) **Good point. Actually, this could be reworked to talk about the conception, planning, etc. from the perspective of the Beast Riders, and I'd very much like to do it that way. I'd like to catch up with you in IRC sometime to discuss this further. Please advise when you'll be around, and I'll make my best attempt to meet you. Thanks. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 17:24, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) *Same problems re:POV with the "attack on the palace" subsection, and most of the first paragraph should be in the prelude section. And with "Galia's abduction" and per 4dot on the introduction of Kira and Gobee and the mention of the raid's purpose.
 * 24) *The stuff about Veitch using the event for whatever purpose should come before the audio drama, unless its referring to that. If it is it's at least partially inaccurate since John Whitman wrote the actual scripts. Also, why does the ref note in the BtS link to Star Wars: Tales of the Jedi ?
 * 25) **Aside from a number of spelling errors and the like, this is a good article&mdash;however, it has a long way to go before it's more than simply a summary of the comic. Also, while normally I don't have a problem with it, passive voice is really overused in it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:04, 27 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Chack, was this supposed to be for the Raid on the Royal Palace article? If so, I've addressed each as you have stated. Thanks for the review! —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:54, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Heh, yeah. Thanks.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:00, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I am still working on this. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Battle of Iziz (Beast Wars)

 * Nominated by: -- Tommy9281 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: WP:TOTJ will never die!

(1 Inqs/0 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Greyman ( Talk ) 05:04, 8 October 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From Greyman:
 * 2) * Like I mentioned to you in #WP:TotJ the other day, that intro needs to be taken to the butcher shop and sliced-and-diced by quite a bit :P From giving it a quick glance over, everything else appears in order -- I'll give 'er a more thorough read within the coming days, Tommy :) Greyman ( Talk ) 13:41, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, and if there is anything else required, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:01, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) The audio drama is an adaptation, not an alternate and conflicting source. There really is no need for a template; a mention in the BtS is sufficient. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:04, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I hate that template anyway. Removed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:47, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) **Given the precedent you set by removing the templates on Gobee's now-Featured article I have reverted the removal. I'm not sure either way but consistency is important. Please try and address this/you may want to open up a CT or whatever. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:04, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Ultimately, this has the same problem as the Raid on Iziz article, in that events are told exclusively from the perspective of the comic. Particular trouble spots are the revelation of the raid's intent, and Jeth's reason for coming to Onderon. This needs to be revised. Oron Kira only needs to be referred to as "Kira" after being introduced. In general, the prelude section could probably be slimmed down a touch, only to what is directly relevant to the battle. Thefourdotelipsis 09:14, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Dedicated to my young friend Master Ooroo, who originally undertook this endeavour with me. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:01, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I am still working on this. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

First Duel in the Iron Citadel

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 14:05, 26 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Naturally, in the spirit of Wookieeproject TOTJ.

(2 Inqs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 23:02, 28 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 08:56, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:07, 13 December 2008 (UTC)

Object

Comment

Lobar Aybock

 * Nominated by: —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:17, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Be easy, it's my first FA nom ;) —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:10, 7 November 2008 (UTC)

(1 Inqs/0 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 08:36, 17 November 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I think the BtS could be expanded a little to mention that some factors in his life such as shockboxing and Tull Raine and his species and homeworld came from other sources initially. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:22, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I received some information from the author and tried to expand it a bit. Let me know what you think. —Xwing328 (Talk) 03:48, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Looks good. I created an "interview" subpage and copied Caledre's message on your talk page there to use as a ref note, which I think is the best way to source it. One thing you might want to do is mention that Calians and Shiva IV were references to Marvel, but other than that it looks good. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:28, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***You can move that to the WP:INT main page if it's not already there for purposes of organization and categorization. ;) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:19, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 6) * Contextify Cus in the intro.
 * 7) **Should be better now.
 * 8) * If he was not a shockboxer before his capture, that should be clarified in intro.
 * 9) **I think fixing the first fixed this, too.
 * 10) *The "bombing of his hometown" might need a battle link.
 * 11) **Does somebody more familiar with the Marvel stories want to write a battle article?
 * 12) * The early life section just doesn't flow well. See what you can do about making the sentences transition to each other a little better.
 * 13) **Hopefully if flows smoothly now.
 * 14) * Is it "shockboxing" or "shocboxing"? I've seen both.
 * 15) **Shockboxing. Fixed.
 * 16) * Contextify who the Rust Rats are and why they are important. It's not clear in the article what their relationship is with Aybock.
 * 17) * hub-buster should be linked.
 * 18) **Done. Now I'll have to write another article to fix redlinks.
 * 19) *I also feel P&T could be beefed a little more.
 * 20) **Beefed. —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:04, 9 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *Fascinating BtS. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:18, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Gracias. Thanks for the review. —Xwing328 (Talk) 17:45, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) Can we get that Tull Raine pic cropped to remove the border? --Eyrezer 20:22, 9 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) *Done. —Xwing328 (Talk) 22:04, 9 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) Could we get a mention of Aybock's condition of a fair fight in the bio? I know you mention it in the P&T but I think it would also be appropriate to mention it earlier. --Eyrezer 23:59, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) Stitchy should be introduced much earlier in the piece, and that whole scene should be reworked just a tad, to explain just why they were "forced" to set in a crowded speedervan. Perhaps a little more detail on just how the fight pans out would be good as well. Also, 4 redlinks. Thefourdotelipsis 02:33, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) "which endured a constant state of war between the Calian Confederacy and the Twelve Tribes of T'Syriél,[4] involving many Calians in continuous battles between the native belligerent species, including Lobar Aybock's father." The wording of the native belligerent species is a bit off. Can you reword it? --Eyrezer 22:39, 3 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Currently 6 redlinks: these should be taken care of within a day or two. The word count is approximately 1,200. And no, there are no images that can be used; they're all from Hyperspace. —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:17, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, one of the Hyperspace images was on the SW.com main page for a time, so you could probably use that. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:22, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I added a crop of the one used to promote the story. Also, the artist posted the illustrations on Deviant Art, but I doubt that would be considered fair use to get a better picture from there, since they're technically Hyperspace images. —Xwing328 (Talk) 19:40, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm pretty sure we have precedent for doing that with Trevas's stuff. Once it's in the wild, it's fair game. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:14, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * At any rate, the image of Aybock running should be used in his infobox, since it was used on the main page of SW.com and is, therefore, fair game. The current image should then replace the existing (and a tad confusing) one of Raine over a defeated opponent. Thefourdotelipsis 02:33, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Just a note, I will get back to address these soon, but I've been very busy recently and am about to go out of town. —Xwing328 (Talk) 05:28, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

Raskta Lsu

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 19:15, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Quite the definition of a "ride-or-die" chick.

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Support
 * 1) Can't say I'm not tired of this subject, but a good job once again. :P Cull Tremayne 16:50, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:53, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Too much PBP in the last body paragraph.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:29, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Yeah, I was figuring that when I was writing it. I'll change it up soon. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *Addressed.
 * 4) You don't need to refer to Sarro Xaj as "Sarro Xaj" all the time (unless there's some really good reason. :P) Thefourdotelipsis 01:15, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *Addressed. Thank you Chack and Fourdot for the reviews. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 05:37, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 7) *"Named after the legendary Raskta Fenni who was the greatest warrior of her time" POV/flowery prose
 * 8) *"and with time she became peerless in her mastery of the lightsaber." POV
 * 9) *"and Lsu once again displayed her unmatched skill with the lightsaber" POV
 * 10) *"Lsu's skill with the lightsaber was far greater than any of the other Jedi" POV
 * 11) *"Several times she had to save her fellow Jedi from Bane, from both his powerful Force abilities and his superior skill with the lightsaber." Unclear antecedent in that second clause.
 * ", which gave him a critical advantage over his unfamiliar opponents. " Clarify, since most Jedi throughout the eons have not used this type of weapon.
 * 1) *"and she eventually became the greatest duelist of her time." POV.
 * 2) *Quotes in prose (P&A) must die.
 * 3) *"In matters of the Force, however, Raskta Lsu was virtually inept" POV.
 * 4) *" though she was still a reckoning force without such support" A bit of flowery prose here.
 * 5) *"Her lack of Force skills cost her her life, as she was unable to sense the approach of Darth Zannah nor protect herself from the attack followed." I daresay this is a bit of original research, or at least POV, unless Karpy specifically stated that was the reason for her fall.
 * 6) *A lot of these are small objections that I might could have fixed myself. However, after I saw three of them in the intro alone, I figured that the author needed a reminder of how to avoid POV and flowery prose, and a good Desk-pounding would help with that. I'm surprised to see this, seeing how's he passed several FAs, but nevertheless, it should be avoided in the future. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:22, 16 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm down for whatever needs to be done. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 19:15, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * That's a really lame lead quote, but with four lines of dialogue, I suppose beggars can't be choosers. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:22, 16 December 2008 (UTC)

Yoxgit

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 02:30, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "You're not an assassin." "Look again."

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:48, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:39, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 05:57, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Just two things: "Producing a lightsaber and taking it to the various executioners." Can you change this? It sounds as though Luke was just showing his lightsaber to the executioners, not attacking them! :p Secondly, could you modify "Richard Marquand's 1983 film, Star Wars Episode VI: Return of the Jedi." Add in the word director because it seems odd to call it "his" film, rather than Lucas'. --Eyrezer 17:09, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Changed the OOU Rebellion era link to Galactic Civil War. You can change it to something else, as long as it stays IU. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:39, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Mils Giel

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:04, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "By Gad, sir, you are a character. There's never any telling what you'll say or do next, except that it's bound to be something astonishing."

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Comments
 * If the Beheboth stuff confuses you, join the club. :P Thefourdotelipsis 13:04, 18 November 2008 (UTC)

Mohs

 * Nominated by: Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Pure Lando Calrissian Trilogy pyramid-power crack. Check your laws of physics at the door - you're in for a wild, wild ride.

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Support
 * 1) Had no trouble with this when it was up for GA. Cull Tremayne 09:52, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * There's got to be some sort of award for "most consistently traitorous sidekick". Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Swokes Swokes

 * Nominated by: SavageBob 12:20, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I'll flay strips of flesh from my body if it means this article gets featured.

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Support
 * 1) Excellent work. One of the best articles I've read recently.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:12, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * Too many "Swokes Swokes" in second and third paragraphs of biology. Use "the species" or something.
 * 3) * "the Swokes Swokes are listed as being stronger and hardier than most species but less agile, clever, and likeable." This seems to be a bit of a contradiction. They are stronger, but are smarter? Or are you saying they are less clever and likeable? Sorry if I didn't explain that bit well.
 * 4) *Very, very nice job. I enjoyed reading this article.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:42, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for your comments. I enjoyed writing it, so I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! I've addressed your first point, but I'm unsure what you're asking in the second. In the D20 Star Wars RPG, Swokes Swokes are stronger and hardier than the average bloke. However, they are less agile, less clever, and less likeable than the average bloke, as well. Does this not come through in the current wording? I think I'm confusing myself! --SavageBob 05:24, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Ah, sorry. That's poor wording on my part. I was saying that it comes across as though they are stronger but clever (rather than "and"). I was simply reading it wrong, however, as it seems fine now.

Comments

Aarrba

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 08:28, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guest nom for WP:TOTJ.

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Support
 * 1) I once planned to FA this character. Good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:22, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * I now understand why this was not done already. :| Thefourdotelipsis 08:28, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I think you could add a quote for P&T, and a better main one.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:35, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the suggestion, Chack. Unfortunately, it's not a legitimate objection, but I'd be more than willing to consider it coming from the comments section. :) Thefourdotelipsis 09:47, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Moved it to there. Now how about it?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:15, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Got a quote in the P/T, but I kinda like the lead. Thefourdotelipsis 05:28, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Pello Scrambas

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 09:47, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Wuhtee-ess.

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Support
 * 1) ChackProject read all WTS noms continues!  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:07, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Ah, ya old fool. Cull Tremayne 01:52, 11 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *Please find what FF page(s) he specifically belongs to, per our new CT of citing FFs.
 * 3) *Apparently, the character's name is a Tuckerization of someone, as you'll see in the list on that page. Please see if you can't find out what that is about and add a BTS note. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:15, 10 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Hoggon

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guest nom for WP:TOTJ.

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:12, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 16:34, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Ridiculously boring! Cull Tremayne 03:52, 11 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) I think a little bit of context in the last paragraph of the body would be good. Stuff about why Sylvar couldn't kill him, and why she was mad when Hoggon shot Ulic. I know that's not directly pertinent to Hoggon, but it could be a bit confusing if one has not read TOTJ.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:22, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I've added a little bit of context there. Don't want to stray too far from the story at hand, but let me know if it's still confusing. Thefourdotelipsis 05:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Omnibuses aren't exactly scanner friendly, so if anyone could oblige, it would be much appreciated. On the subject of quotes, the one required one is there&mdash;if people want more, please, feel free to add them. Anything, anywhere. Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 22 November 2008 (UTC)

Lando Calrissian

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:35, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: From the two directors that brought you Tales of the Jedi and Wraith Squadron! From the project behind Jaina Solo! From the minds behind Mara Jade Skywalker, an action-packed adventure filled with suspense, betrayal, romance, and, of course, inimitable charm. Now playing: The smoothest FAN ever to grace this page, Lando Calrissian!

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Support
 * 1) As co-nominator. Greyman ( Talk ) 20:45, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

I dare object to Lando
 * 1) No info whatsoever from Lando Calrissian: Idiot's Array and Crisis on Cloud City. Not smooth. Thefourdotelipsis 03:04, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The latter has been addressed; I've asked Borsk about the former. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Former is also addressed now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ditto Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin. - Lord Hydronium 03:10, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I've went ahead and added a sentence or two of some background information for this objection. I looked over my copy of the source again and couldn't see anything new beyond the sentences I just added. Is there something specific you're thinking of that I could work in? Greyman ( Talk ) 13:51, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ** There's some other bits on pages 50, 76, and 88. - Lord Hydronium 08:27, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Information added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * The mentions of Ymile are rather confusingly arranged. There's a picture of her near where Lando wins the bet with Raynor, but no reference to her in the text, then much later in the article it mentions she helped Lando win. That second part should be noted and clarified at the time it actually occurs; also, she should be linked there, since she isn't at the moment. - Lord Hydronium 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Succession box should include Treece; Action Tidings and the Cloud City Databank entry both say he was the Administrator of Cloud City. - Lord Hydronium 00:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fixed the Ymile bits and buffed Lady Luck overall. Also, adjusted succession box, reffed from the actual Marvel comics though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:15, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Information missing on how Lando got back Cloud City, from The New Essential Guide to Characters. Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds not in; amongst the things to add is a bit in there about how Lando raised Tibanna profits that's also in the NEC. - Lord Hydronium 07:29, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **The Tibanna profits bit is already in there, just referenced from another source. The Cloud City re-taking has been added. Still working on GATOW. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Two tidbits from GATORW added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:41, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Added it to the "Sources" list as well. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) ***Oh, I see; I was searching for "percent". - Lord Hydronium 19:52, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * More NEGTC tidbits: Lando giving control of Cloud City to the Ugnaughts after Zorba cedes it. Lando refusing to go to Chewbacca's funeral out of guilt. From GG3: Lobot convinced Lando to help Leia and the group. - Lord Hydronium 07:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **All of the above fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *More missing sources: Rebellion Era Sourcebook, Roleplaying Game Revised Core Rulebook, Roleplaying Game: Saga Edition Core Rulebook, Dark Empire Sourcebook, The Truce at Bakura Sourcebook, Han Solo and the Corporate Sector Sourcebook (I just spotted a small mention, but there could be more), Heir to the Empire Sourcebook, The Last Command Sourcebook, and Star Wars Trilogy Sourcebook - Special Edition. For now. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * for The Truce at Bakura, but it contains unique information to add. - Lord Hydronium 23:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *In addition to the above, the following appearances and mentions are missing: Out of the Closet: The Assassin's Tale, Darksaber, Force Heretic I: Remnant, Therefore I Am: The Tale of IG-88, Payback: The Tale of Dengar, The Last One Standing: The Tale of Boba Fett, X-wing: Rogue Squadron, X-wing: Wedge's Gamble, X-wing: Wraith Squadron, Young Jedi Knights: Heirs of the Force, Young Jedi Knights: The Lost Ones, Young Jedi Knights: Lightsabers, Young Jedi Knights: Darkest Knight, Young Jedi Knights: Shards of Alderaan, Young Jedi Knights: Jedi Bounty, and Young Jedi Knights: The Emperor's Plague. - Lord Hydronium 01:17, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *Almost forgot: None of the movie novelizations or radio dramas are included. - Lord Hydronium 01:19, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Han will have these objections down! We've gotta give them more time! (In all seriousness, we are working on these). Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:40, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) Gah, redlinks in source list, mine Databank and Wizards. Those first two totally slipped me mind.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) *Red links busted. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:56, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Databank has been mined and source list updated. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:32, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) Infobox not fully/correctly sourced.  Graestan ( Talk ) 04:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) *I think I got the missing reference. If you desire other sourcing, please let me know. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:22, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) **Got it on the second try. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) I'd like to take Yrf's comment below and turn it into an actual objection; for instance, I know there are quotes to be had by or about Lando and/or what he was up to at the time for the LCA, TTT, and BFC. Ideally, since the sections are so long, each should probably have a quote.  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:48, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) *All sections now have quotes except three tiny sections in the "Non-canon appearances" section in the BtS since quotes do not exist for those parts. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:32, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) **Hope you found at least one funny one from LCA. ;) Graestan ( Talk ) 23:12, 25 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not a formal objection, but there's space for a lot more quotes in the article. Yrfeloran 04:13, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Villian Dance

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:08, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ChackProject Death Star continues. And I got another up my sleeve, so just wait.

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Support
 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:17, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 00:41, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 05:48, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * " was one of ten scuttled to escort a " I don't think "scuttled" as the right word here, and I'm not sure what it's supposed to be.
 * 3) **Changed.
 * 4) * I'd like to hear a little more about his reaction to the training mishap.
 * 5) **Added.
 * 6) * "Alpha Squadron, along with nine others" Nine other squadrons?
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:33, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thanks Ataru.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 18:43, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) Other stuff
 * 11) * "With a few maneuvers, he was able to fly up the enemy ship." In the middle of the first section. What does this mean exactly? He was able to fly upon the enemy ship? Any why did he need to do maneuvers anyway? Was he in danger of being shot down by the shuttle or something?
 * 12) **Hope I got this clarified.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Dance took a moment to revel about his life." This reads a little awkwardly to me. He took a moment to celebrate his life? Just not sure it's the best choice of words.
 * 14) **Rephrased.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * "A short time after destroying the shuttle, Dance's squad was one of ten sent to escort a shuttle" Mind changing one of those "shuttle"s to something else? It reads a little weird as is.
 * 16) **Changed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * "Before he did this, he proposed to Kaarz, who told him that she would think about it, but planned to go join the Rebellion along with Dance, while Ratua and Roothes headed to meet Ratua's family on Coruscant and Divini also decided to join the Rebel Alliance." Last sentence in the Bio. This is somewhat of a run-on. Mind splitting it up so that it doesn't seem so jumbled?
 * 18) **No problem. That was pretty ugly, actually. Should be better now.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) *Nice job once again. Cull Tremayne 01:21, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) **Thank you.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:50, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Second Battle of Bakura (Galactic Civil War)

 * Nomination by: - Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first major project here and a significant Expanded Universe event. I managed to correct most of the errors so it is up to you now to decide. Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

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Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *The intro could do a better job of setting the stage for the Battle of Bakura. How did the Rebels get there? How did the battle start? Etc. By and large, this needs to be about doubled in length
 * 3) *Redlinks in infobox.
 * 4) *You'll need a link to the conquest of G'rho
 * 5) *Who is "The Admiral" mentioned in 3rd paragraph of Background? Please provide context.
 * 6) *You'll need to explain the advantages of enteching humans a little more clearly please for the sake of the reader, as well as Sibwarra's role therein.
 * 7) *Is Shreeftut or whatever a title or person? There should be consistent capitalization depending on which one it is.
 * 8) *Please limit the use of parentheses in articles.
 * 9) *Correct these and I will continue my review. I would also caution you to beware of POV. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) Toprawa:
 * 11) *I didn't think I'd ever say this, but this article is way too detailed. This isn't so much an article on the battle as it's a summary of the novel itself. I would strongly recommend going through and strictly condensing the narration into details about actual conflict. A good prelude summary is always essential for a battle article, but be careful of going off on extraneous tangents from the battle itself. As a way of keeping the article focused, try sectioning it into three major sections, "Prelude," "The battle," and "Aftermath," and subsection from there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:38, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not bad for a first shot, but this will need some work. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)

XJ-2 airspeeder

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 11:14, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Bill, I believe this is killing me."

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Support
 * 1)  Greyman ( Talk ) 17:11, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:05, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 06:01, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Real minor thing: "was later put back into production by Narglatch during the Galactic Civil War." I'd suggest you remove this, or change it to something like "the line was later put back...". I'd do it myself, but I don't know if you'd prefer removing this info or rephrasing it. I think it's a bit irrelevant and confusing to the specific model and the article as it is now. Is that clear, or am I being a bit confusing here? Apologies if I'm not explaining myself well.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:01, 28 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Tweaked. Thefourdotelipsis 08:46, 28 November 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Never thought I'd say this but...thanks Galaxies. :S Thefourdotelipsis 11:14, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Slyther Bushforb

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Yes, sweetheart?" "There's a girl wants to see you. Her name's Loddik." "A customer?" "I guess so. You'll want to see her anyway. She's a knockout."

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I kinda thought this would be longer. Cull Tremayne 06:02, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * I implore all readers to actually read the Databank entry before reading the Wook entry. Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Magaloof

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 23:23, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Beefed up old GA.

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:27, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Weird to see a BtS longer than any other section. Cull Tremayne 08:48, 10 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * Believe it or not, it's WTS. Thefourdotelipsis 23:23, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Nar Hida

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 00:03, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: WTS...dynamite!

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Support
 * 1) It wasn't that bad.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:11, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Kinda boring though. Cull Tremayne 06:15, 9 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * Another beefed up GA. Actually, with this one, I was just too lazy, and as Acky said, "Do you really want to put that on the main page?" Well, I don't really, but...too bad. We need to drive more people away with stupidity, people. Thefourdotelipsis 00:03, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

BesGas Three

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 00:27, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: In the words of Harry Secombe, "MORE!?"

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Support
 * 1) Lord Hydronium 01:40, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice, boring GA. And wow, that is a meaty BTS. Cull Tremayne 06:18, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:58, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --Eyrezer 17:16, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * The first paragraph of the BTS should be reworked to more accurately show the out of universe history of it: an (I believe) unidentified refinery appeared in a McQuarrie painting used in the ISWU, a refinery appeared in ESB, and "BesGas Three" appeared in Dark Nest, with the WTS submission form being the first to connect all three. - Lord Hydronium 08:42, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *"When the Confederacy attacked Bespin, independently operated harvesting platforms such as BesGas Three were destroyed, as the invaders hoped to commandeer the facilities for their own use" This does not make sense. They destroyed the facilities because they wanted to use them? Please clarify.
 * 3) *If there were residential decks on BG3 in 36 ABY, does that mean that the place became crewed by sentients? If so, that should be noted.
 * 4) *Otherwise good. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:08, 16 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Now with a nice, meaty BTS. Thefourdotelipsis 00:27, 24 November 2008 (UTC)

Tynnan

 * Nomination by: --Eyrezer 03:24, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's been a while...

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Support
 * 1) SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Knowing that the Biology objection will be fixed. Cull Tremayne 07:45, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *It's been addressed, I think. I'm new here, so please let me know if I haven't properly crossed it out below! --SavageBob 05:53, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) If only because it gives us a chance to link tooth on the front page again. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:29, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:59, 18 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:13, 18 December 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) This is good, but I think there are a few places where we can polish it up a bit more.
 * 2) * "They were discovered by Republic scouts . . ." Do we know when?
 * 3) **Sadly not.
 * 4) * "Terraforming" throughout: I thought that the correct in-universe term for this was "Vongformed" when the YV are the ones doing it. Not so?
 * 5) **Vongformed redirects to terraforming on the Wook. Agents of Chaos itslef mentions neither word specifically so it is really just a matter or style. I don't mind either way.
 * 6) ***Well, since terraform means "to make like the Earth", it seems odd to use it for something so, er, alien. Our terraforming article does have this line: "The Yuuzhan Vong phrase was known as worldshaping, but others referred to it as Vongforming or Vongformation." SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * "This insulation gave them a plump form that many species viewed as cute and pudgy." Doesn't pudgy mean plump?
 * 8) **I removed the "and pudgy."
 * 9) ***"Pudgy" and "plump" do not mean the exact same thing; each carries connotations the other does not necessarily possess. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:22, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ****Pudgy includes the notion of shortness along with fatness, so it's probably the better of the two to use. However, I stand by my suggestion that using both is redundant. SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * I think the "Biology and appearance" section should be beefed up a bit to mention other notable parts of the Tynnan physiology. The current writeup makes no mention of their brown fur; large, pointed ears; claws; back noses, short snouts; whiskers; tails; number of digits; or bipedalism. As all of these things are evident from the illustrations we have available, they should be mentioned.
 * 12) * Nowhere is it mentioned that they are adept swimmers. Perhaps this should be added to the first section as well.
 * 13) **I'll get on to this and the previous one and let you know when I'm done.
 * 14) * The image captions are a bit sparse. Might be a good idea to rewrite them with the goal of being illustrative. Why was this particular image placed in this particular spot? For example, the image currently captioned "A Tynnan" might be changed to "Tynnans wore belts with many pouches but otherwise had no need of clothing," since that's what the text at that spot is talking about.
 * 15) **Lol - this objection doesn't surprise me, considering my reverse objection to your nom :p Although on second look, is this Tynnan actually wearing a shirt? It is hard because of the colouration.
 * 16) ***He he, yes. On closer inspection, I don't think that Tynnan is wearing a shirt; you can see little wisps of fur all down the sides of his/her belly and chest. While the captions on Lutrillian were probably too long before you commented, I do believe that captions should be descriptive, thus showing that a particular image was added for a reason, not just for decoration. This is especially important since all of our images are used under fair use provisions. Our claims to needing the images are bolstered if we can show why the images are necessary for the article to be better understood rather than being there just to look pretty. :) SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *Again, nice work! A little more spit and shine, and I think this is ready for FA. --SavageBob 05:28, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ** Commented on Eyrezer's comments. None of these things are make-it-or-break it for me, but I did want to voice my concerns. :) SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) Toprawa:
 * 20) * Who is 'they'? The Republic or the Tynnans? "They were careful to ensure that economic and corporate development proceeded apace with environmental safeguards."
 * 21) * I'm not sure what's going on with the beginning of this. Can you clarify? "They were careful to ensure that economic and corporate development proceeded apace with environmental safeguards."
 * 22) **I think both of these are now addressed. --Eyrezer 18:17, 18 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Context for SELCORE, please: "This gave SELCORE new impetus to establish safe corridors and transit points." Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:04, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **I think Culator addressed this.
 * 25) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 26) * Tynna isn't linked in the body and could be mentioned a little earlier. Early mentions of their homeworld don't name it.
 * 27) * "These incisors were an evolutionary holdover from ancestors who gnawed wood to build river dams; the species had long ceased this behavior, so each succeeding generation grew shorter teeth." Long ceased by when? Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * The redlinks will be busted shortly, and a lead quote is being found. --Eyrezer 03:24, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm not opposing, so I'd like my remaining comments above to be taken as suggestions rather than opposition. The article's a good read on a fun species. Nice work, Eyrezer. SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *(Following comment moved from "Oppose" section above, as it is merely a suggestion. SavageBob 07:40, 7 December 2008 (UTC)) I think the descriptions of individual Tynnans in the "Tynnans in the galaxy" section are too long. An entire detailed paragraph about each notable Tynnan is just too much in my opinion. Better to cut them to a sentence or two and let the reader click the link on their name if they want to learn more.
 * 2) **I disagree. If any of those individuals had decent article written for them, they could each be FAs. These are summaries.
 * 3) ***They're looong summaries, though. In an ideal world (of my own creation :)), these would be short, just mentioning each character and what he or she is notable or. Then, if I wanted a summary, I could find it in the lead section of the character's article. Then, if I want even more detail, I would find it by reading the full body of the character's article. The summaries in the Tynnan article now are of lead length, so it seems a bit much to have them all. And while I understand that there are few enough known Tynnans in SW fiction to make this section's size reasonable, imagine that with each new notable Tynnan mentioned in SW fiction that we add another similarly sized paragraph. Eventually, the section becomes unwieldy. Granted, that time is not now, but I just don't see the point in having it all beefy now and then cutting it back in the future anyway. SavageBob 08:53, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ****They're not that long. Can you please indicate the rule under which this objection falls? Sheer opinion cannot be sufficient reason to object. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:22, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *****Wookieepedia's Manual of Style includes this line: "For information on the most basic writing techniques and styles, which are used here, see Wikipedia's Manual of Style." Part of Wikipedia's manual of style is the summary style guideline that asserts that long sections should be spun off into their own articles, leaving only a summary in their place. Now, we don't have a firm rule that we follow summary style here, so I guess this objection is not binding. But take a look at some of the summaries in the Tynnan article. How is it pertinent to our knowledge of Tynnans as a whole to know that "A number of items were stolen by Gomalo, a Rodian slaver recently released from prison, whose own sculpture was among the loot. It contained the locations of a nebula in which he had stowed the body of a Jedi Knight frozen in carbonite. The Teleus' artworks were later recovered by Ezra Du'Re of the Office of Peace and Security"? Or that "The team struggled to find a buyer for their unique item and was forced to approach the dangerous hunter Tyro Viveca. This contact turned the tables on Noone, hunting the thief in his compound on Kabal. It was only Dawson's demolitions skills that enabled the team of thieves to defeat the Krish and escape the planet"? This is only tangentially about Tynnans, in my opinion, so it should be cut down. But since there's no policy on summary style here, I'm leaving this as my personal opinion (please show me the policy that says I can't express that), and not objecting based on it. :) SavageBob 01:26, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

ARC-77

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 06:52, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Well, you sir, are a cowardly son of a bitch! You just shot an unarmed man!" "Well, he shoulda armed himself..."

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Support Oppose
 * 1) This user knows that Fordo owns.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:51, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Fordo doesnt just own, but he PWNS!!! --Clonehunter 19:31, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) A bit of context on the Muunilinst 10 in the intro would be helpful. Otherwise, great job. I love the "Biography" titles.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:24, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added. Thefourdotelipsis 22:09, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Could we perhaps split the Muunilinst stuff into two (sub)sections? As is the sectioning is a tad unbalanced with one five-, one three- and one single-paragraph section. Any chance of expanding the P&T a little bit with stuff from the cartoon? Something about his bravery or something similar or mention that he had no qualms about retreating when necessary despite his bombastic approach to situations, or something to that effect, might make a good addition. Finally, any chance of an additional quote or two? (Not an objection proper). :-P -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:27, 16 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Rescanned infobox image is incoming. Thefourdotelipsis 06:52, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, it's not, but if someone could oblige, it'd be much appreciated. :P Thefourdotelipsis 22:09, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * "The survivors, though in a critical condition, survived" made me laugh. :-P -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:27, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Oh yeah, any particular reason for the use of "Confederate" as opposed to "Separatist"? I'm not saying you shouldn't use it, it just reads oddly sometimes since Separatist is the more commonly used term in canon. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:04, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

The Trickery of Vosdia Nooma

 * Nomination by: 19:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Because setting precedents seems to be my thing, I present to you: Rodian Theater at its finest!

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Support Oppose
 * 1) --Eyrezer 19:39, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Very nice, but you need to get rid of that redlink in the intro, per Rule 8. --Eyrezer 17:29, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Thanks, and busted. Totally forgot about that one. 17:48, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Project started because of Lord Hydronium's QOTD nom listed here. Go and read it (and vote if you'd like). It essentially embodies the entire play and will be a nice setup for your readthrough (which is actually pretty long for being single-source and information culled from a review). Thank god for HoloNet News entries. 19:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Biscuit Baron

 * Nomination by: 20:00, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Dinner and a movie!

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Support Oppose Comments
 * 1) —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:41, 8 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Trendsetting? Nah. Cull Tremayne 07:17, 9 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 03:13, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) BB Me ASAP!  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 23:27, 18 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Eyrezer:
 * 2) * Can you reword this: "the building which housed the business possessed a cylinder-type shape to its form with a large dome atop." The building description seems a little awkward.
 * 3) **Yeah, I figured it would. Reworded to "On Sullust, the Biscuit Baron building was cylindrical in shape and possessed a large large dome atop..." and combined the sentence immediately following.
 * 4) * In thhe Bantha Biscuit paragraph, it sounds like the creature eats the actual planet. Is this the case or is it more a case of eating all vegetation on the planet? Also the sentence about it changing is a bit awkward. --Eyrezer 17:43, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **I'm not sure if it's figurative, but page 5 of the comic (conveniently seen here) shows a planet essentially disintegrating. Also, changed slightly; hopefully it reads better.
 * 6) ***It still needs to be sourced :p
 * 7) **Thanks for the read :D 17:58, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Good article nominations/Biscuit Baron. 20:00, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Crev Bombaasa

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:37, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: guest nom for Cav's one-man WookieeProject.

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Support
 * 1) Always liked this character.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:56, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Cull Tremayne 04:44, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 21:08, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * "A well-educated man of refined manner and good taste, " A bit POVish IMHO.
 * 3) **Changed.
 * 4) * I'd like to see a link to Hutts' demise in the intro.
 * 5) **Linked to a battle.
 * 6) * "A cultured, well-educated man with a taste for sharp suits and expensive jewelery, he had an insect-like appearance and a genteel, refined manner. Despite this, however, he was known to have a vicious streak" All of this would fit better in P&T, IMO, but if there's a good explanation for its placement, I'm not concerned.
 * 7) **Well, I like to give readers a bit of an idea of a character P&T in the bio as it provides context for his actions, and I think it's particularly relevant to highlight his shift from bad-guy to good-guy.
 * 8) ***Meh, whatever. As long as it's not insisted upon that others necessarily adhere to this. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Sure. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * "Bombaasa's Cartel allowed his and others' criminal organizations protection from such large groups" Some awkward wording here.
 * 11) **Tweaked a little; satisfactory?
 * 12) * " unencumbered in exchange for a pipelink" Could this possibly be made a little clearer (the pipelink bit). As far as I know, that's only internet slang, and not really a word.
 * 13) **I think it's what's used in the source, but I've clarified it as much as I think I can.
 * 14) ***That's better. I almost changed it to pipeline, but even that didn't make sense. What you've got now is good. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * "For several years, Bombaasa personally continued to rise in prominence until he effectively ruled Pembric II." This sentence does not fit well where it is-it disrupts the flow of the prose.
 * 16) **You're right, it's a byproduct of adding stuff in after writing it. I've moved it up to the next section; there's not really anywhere else it can go.
 * 17) * "The New Republic envoys and Drake and his bouncers ultimately fled Kebbo and his backup, as well as a fuming Bombaasa" Sentence is unclear.
 * 18) **Better?
 * 19) * Contextify Wild Karrde on first mention.
 * 20) **"&hellip;the ship used by Talon Karrde, a powerful crime lord and information broker&hellip;"
 * 21) ***Facepalm. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * "after leaving his ship in the company of an attractive woman;" Clausal antecedent is unclear; who left the ship?
 * 23) **Reworked.
 * 24) * The bit on the Solos killing the commander and yammosk is incorrect. Please read over The Unifying Force again and correct it.
 * 25) **Removed it, it's not really necessary.
 * 26) ***I just checked the book, and the Solos had to be rescued by Karrde and Calrissian. That might be pertinent. If not, I'll strike. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) ****I added in a little clarifying it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * "As Karrde implored Bombaasa to keep the ship in his targets" Unclear sentence. Not sure what this should be.
 * 29) **Clarified.
 * 30) * "Additionally, he had a taste for expensive jewelery, which was described as tasteful" Wording.
 * 31) **Changed.
 * 32) * "Bombaasa's newfound compassion" Is compassion the right word for this?
 * 33) **Changed.
 * 34) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:08, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) **And yourself. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:00, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * A really neat character. Cross-medium and multi-author, but without any continuity issues whatsoever (not including the visual discrepancy in Galaxies). Thanks to Culator for providing me with the Galaxies info and thanks to Cav for letting me have this. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:37, 1 December 2008 (UTC)

Tam Elgrin

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 04:03, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first-ever GA, over 1000 words, so I thought, "What the hell. I'll try it."

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 * 1) Next time, though, make sure you copyedit more thoroughly, 'cuz I might not be able to fix everything. ;-)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:54, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Aaaallston!!! Cull Tremayne 00:55, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * The intro could be a little longer. Try expanding it from stuff relevant to Danni Quee and Tarc.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Contextify Antilles on first mention.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * P&T can be much, much larger. (And should be).
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) ***Yes, but you did so with a lot of redundant referencing. Not that I couldn't go in and fix it, but some lessons are better learned by experience. If two sentences in a row are referenced from the same source, there's no need to add additional tags. Additionally, the P&T doesn't flow well and could use restructuring. Take it slow, organize it well instead of rushing the fix. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:36, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Addressed, I hope.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:44, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *****There's a whole bunch on pages 159-162 of the paperback that could go in there. Take your pick, but in particular, some of Tser's comments are really good stuff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:53, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ******Well this objection was a doozy, wasn't it? :) Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 03:20, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * The relationship with the Solos, Tarc, and Elgrin should be expanded.
 * 13) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 23:27, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Due to my large knowledge of Enemy Lines, I was able to do a lot of cleanup myself, but be aware that there was lots needed. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:53, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

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Zonder

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Evasive Action

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Oppose
 * 1) "Offee, being a healer, was sent to Felucia in the waning stages of the war, and Zonder accompanied her." The connection with Offee being a healer and being sent to Felucia isn't clear here. Might be best to clarify or remove it. "At Employment Center D4176, which was meant for non-Humans only." Not sure if this was meant to be part of the previous sentence or the next, or if it's missing something. Other than that, excellent, and I only just noticed the Jokhalli/divot thing, which is really cool. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 02:05, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Maybe there should be something in there about how his active life was untypical for Selonian males? Yrfeloran 22:32, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

IG-72

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Interesting at first but it goes downhill from there.

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Support
 * 1) IGs are awesome.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:11, 6 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "gaining notoriety for the IG-series" A bit of context on why the fact that he was of the IG series was notable waould be good.
 * 3) **I think you're misinterpreting the text. Its saying that his actions as a bounty hunter made more people aware of the existence of the IG-series.
 * 4) ***Bah! I completely misread that. I thought you mean the was notable because he was an IG.
 * 5) * Can we get a date on his hunt for Tallon in the intro?
 * 6) **Done.
 * 7) * What were his seemingly random choice of targets? You mention that his targets appeared random to many. Do we know what was the pattern was, then?
 * 8) **Not really. The implication is that he was taking down people for the Empire, but it's not canonically established.
 * 9) ***I suspected that this wasn't revealed (it's not like you to miss stuff). No problems here then.
 * 10) * "The four IG-88s carried on with their planned Droid Revolution, but by the time of the Battle of Endor they had all been destroyed or deactivated." I'd say this bit is unneeded.
 * 11) **Well, I don't like to end bios too suddenly, and this sentence essentially serves as a compressed legacy section. It's not essential but I think it's somewhat relevant and does more good than harm.
 * 12) ***You're right. I was a little unsure about this objection for that reason.
 * 13) *Good work overall.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:39, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thank you very much. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:55, 5 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Working on getting a better infobox image. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)

Ylenic It'kla

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 08:52, 10 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You'd think he'd be more interesting.

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 * 1) Can you be more specific as to the FactFiles entries? Ie, the format in the current CT. --Eyrezer 16:50, 12 December 2008 (UTC)

Missile Boat

 * Nominated by: MIS Tau 1 22:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I've merged/deleted/restored this article similar to it's FA status

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IG-88A

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Finally, it's done. The walking, canon defying droid!

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Object
 * 1) Stuff
 * 2) *How sure are we that the picture being used is IG-88A? Isn't it more likely that it's IG-88B?
 * 3) *Can we get more detail on his reactivation? I'm thinking specifically in regards to his appearance in Star Wars 85: The Hero. How did he fail to capture Lando? What was his role there?
 * 4) *In addition, is that really all we know about his role in YJK? You were able to get three whole sections just from the short story "I Think Therefore I Am". Surely more can be mined from three books than a paragraph and a half.
 * 5) *Beef up the BtS please. Explain how TNEGtC explained that it was IG-88A in Marvel. Explain why it needs to be IG-88A in Forces of Corruption and not IG-88B. (He is able to infect the Death Star, etc.) Explain his weird appearance in Kenix Kil: The Bounty Hunters and why it needs to be IG-88A. I don't think it's specified that it's IG-88A in that story, there's only a pic of him.
 * 6) *Gotta question some of the sources and appearances there. Why do we assume that it's IG-88A in Lego Star Wars, or the Complete Visual Dictionary? Is he specifically mentioned as such? Unless IG-88A is mentioned specifically, it probably shouldn't be listed should it?
 * 7) *Sorta in conjunction with the previous objection. Should we be using Image:IG-88 equipment.jpg? It's essentially the same image as Image:IG88B.jpg, meant to represent IG-88B. So is this pic actually of IG-88A specifically?
 * 8) *Other than that, nice to see Count Droidfish's balonium wiped away. Nice job. Cull Tremayne 00:12, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) I think the Equipment and abilities section should be proseified and expanded. I'd expect it to be quite large given the amount of info I think we know. I think the P&T could be expanded a fair bit too; it should talk about his self-confidence or whatever you'd call it, his ambition, etc. The BtS could also be expanded a bit with his history and the original stuff from WEG/EGtC and the differences with it and Tales. (I know I said that wouldn't be necessary but on second thought I think it is). -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:29, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) I think the BTS needs to be structured more appropriately for the character's OOU history; he wasn't really created for ESB if that character turned out not to even be him. Don't feel you have to do the standard linear "He was created for X, used in Y, etc." format if it doesn't really fit for the character. - Lord Hydronium 06:23, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * After reading IG-72, why not read this one?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Ronderu lij Kummar

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:19, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A really neat character who may well be marginalized by later stuff.

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 * 1) I FA'd Grievous, after all.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:18, 15 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) "Jenuwaa dragged her body out to see" Is it supposed to be "sea"? Also, I think you may want to change the wording, since it took me a minute to realize that the Jenuwaa was not a species. Otherwsie, very well done. I sure hope TCW doesn't destroy her character.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:41, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Whoops. Reworded for clarity. Thanks; I hope so too. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:06, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

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Darth Millennial

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:19, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Former GA. 1,174 words.

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 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:21, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

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Buran Borsil

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:19, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Former GA. Part of the somewhat on-hold AckyProject GOSS. 1,141 words.

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Unidentified Alderaanian stormtrooper

 * Nominated by: Cull Tremayne 05:59, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Stradley does know what he's doing sometimes.

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 * 1) Pre-nom reviewed Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:35, 17 December 2008 (UTC)

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