Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations



This page is for the nomination of "comprehensive articles". For a list of "comprehensive articles", see Category:Wookieepedia comprehensive articles.


 * Comprehensive article nominations history
 * Comprehensive article nominations archiving checklist

What is a "comprehensive article?"

A "comprehensive article" is an article that contains all information regarding the topic. Often, "comprehensive articles" cannot reach Featured or Good Article status due to their limited content. This process is intended to recognize articles that contain all relevant canon information, yet are still under the 250 word limit required for a Good Article. The purpose of this is twofold&mdash;firstly, to help users distinguish what is a stub, and what is merely a short article with no further relevant material to be added, and, more importantly, to highlight for the reader when they are reading something that has been judged definitely "comprehensive"&mdash;that is, a guarantee to the reader that whatever they are reading contains the sum total of all available content.

Nominations and promotions of the Comprehensive article process are overseen by a collective of users known as the "EduCorps," which is made up of the Inquisitorius, the AgriCorps, and various other experienced users who are considered qualified to adequately judge the nominated material.

Lucasfilm Ltd. and its many licensees continue to expand the Star Wars universe. Since new information might become available, it may be necessary to revoke a "comprehensive article's" status. A forum will be used to nominate articles that have fallen out-of-date. Members of the EduCorps will then post a warning template on that page, and a grace period of one week will be instituted in which the article can be improved. If there is a significant amount of new information, it is likely that once updated, the article will become eligible for Good article status, and thereby ineligible for Comprehensive article status.

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia. This is, of course, within reason. If a topic only has a very limited degree of content that cannot be divided up into the relevant article sections, it is not required that it follow the Layout Guide precisely. This is to be judged on a case-by-case basis.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have no redlinks.
 * 8) &hellip;have all relevant canon information presented.
 * 9) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information. While this is not required for an article possessing a singular source, it is encouraged, as it provides both uniformity and a good infrastructure should the topic be referenced in any future materials.
 * 10) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 11) &hellip;provide at least one relevant quote on the article if available.
 * 12) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section for In-Universe articles.
 * 13) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, must not exceed 250 words in length (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Any articles exceeding the limit should be taken to the Good Article nominations page for consideration.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of comprehensive status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all thirteen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add CAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article in accordance with the established rules.
 * 5) Nominators and supporters will adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied. Objectors may also make alterations&mdash;if there is any reason for contention on a given point, it should be settled in a civil manner in the nomination field itself.
 * 6) Users may not vote on their own articles.
 * 7) There is no limit to the amount of nominations a given user can submit at any given time.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) There are several ways in which an article can receive the required number of votes. Within a 48-hour period of nomination, only EduCorps votes will count towards the total, although anyone may choose to vote in that window. If two members of the EduCorps support a nomination in that window, and there are no outstanding objections, the article can be considered a "Comprehensive article" and be tagged with the template 48 hours after the initial nomination.  The talk page will also be tagged with the CA template. When the 48 hours are up, any user's votes will contribute towards the total. If one EduCorps member has voted for an article after a week, three regular votes will be required. After the 48 hour period, an article can still also pass with just two EduCorps votes.
 * 6) Once a nomination is successful, it will be placed on the Comprehensive article list. Instructions on how to archive nominations, successful or otherwise, can be found here. Anyone can archive a nomination&mdash;just make sure it has the correct number of votes, has been nominated for at least a week (or 48 hours if there are two EC votes), and that there are absolutely no outstanding objections. If you are not sure how to do this, just ask, and someone will likely be more than willing to help you. Also, if you think you can slip one past us, think again&mdash;someone is always watching you.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to instantaneous removal by EduCorps members if objections are not addressed, or at least not answered, after a period of 2 weeks.

Unidentified mine operator

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:49, August 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Defensive beaurocrat

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1)  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 11:25, August 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) looks worthy -- DarthRage Leave a message after the beep 23:17, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Menkooroo 04:13, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:57, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) "He was presumed to have been killed when Sykes destroyed the control room." Speculation. Besides, it is not even required to destroy the control room.  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 08:48, August 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Removed, but every time I played, I needed to destroy the control center before the game let me proceed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 09:49, August 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Weird. Every time I played it, I only had to destroy the plasma miners to progress. Maybe it depends on the game's version or something? QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 11:25, August 11, 2010 (UTC)


 * 1) * The intro and the bio are two separate entities, so context is needed on Borvo in the latter. You've mentioned that he's working for Borvo in the intro, but you've gotta mention it in the bio, too.
 * 2) *Is it known who the flight leader of Bravo Squadron is? If so, can you pipelink them? Menkooroo 01:21, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:19, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Cav
 * 5) * Do we have an article for Sykes' flight leader?
 * 6) * Do we know who voice him as he apparently has dialogue? - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:48, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) **It is possible this guy is actually Smeer Ze-Trios, in which case we would know his VA. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:19, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Jujiggum
 * 9) *The writing is extremely choppy. Please combine some sentences for better flow.
 * 10) *Addressed.
 * 11) *"The director became verbally offensive, calling his mine a "legal operation."" How is calling his mine a "legal operation" being verbally offensive?
 * 12) **I smidged the words around.
 * 13) *"His words, however, did not detract Sykes" "Detract" means "to reduce or take away the value of" or "to deny or take away as in a quality or achievment to make its subject seem less impressive." I don't think that's what you mean here&hellip;
 * 14) **I guess deter would work better.
 * 15) *There is enough info for at least a short P&T.
 * 16) **The best I can come up with is "This individual became defensive when someone challenged his camp."
 * 17) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 00:07, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thanks for taking the time to check this article. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:19, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Comm 4

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 11:52, August 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Labeled as technology, not a structure.

(1 ECs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:39, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Looks good to me -- DarthRage Leave a message after the beep 23:15, August 30, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Be more specific about how it was destroyed. Was it disabled by infiltrators? Destroyed in a space battle?
 * 3) * Can it be proven that it was created in 32 BBY? Just because it got deployed above Naboo in that year doesn't mean it was manufactured then. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:07, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) **Context added; and I cannot prove it was created in 32 BBY so I removed the information. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 11:27, August 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Not Soresu
 * 6) *Keeping the second source as just "The New Essential Chronology" and sticking a source to Battle for Naboo in the middle of the first sentence would be a bit more straightforward than the explanatory note included with your second source. Keep it simple! :^D
 * 7) **While I agree it would be more simple, that was how I was instructed to source 32 BBY.
 * 8) ***Mind if I ask by who? It seems a really roundabout and unnecessary way of referencing. I really think that: "Comm 4 was a communications satellite established by the Trade Federation during its invasion of Naboo[1] in 32 BBY.[2]" would be simpler and better, with [1] going to the video game and [2] going to the NEC without all the explanatory stuff. Menkooroo 04:10, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) * Two consecutive sentences beginning with "The Satellite" --- can you change it up?
 * 10) **Indeed I can.
 * 11) * Can you make the bts into two sentences? One-sentence paragraphs are frowned upon. Good work! Menkooroo 00:44, September 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) **Addressed. Thanks for your review. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:25, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Boosqueak

 * Nominated by: Eyrezer 03:30, August 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A menagerie of creatures from the Atrivis sector

(0 ECs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object
 * 1) Shouldn't the rare folded ear boosqueak have its own article? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:46, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done, with a new nomination below! --Eyrezer 01:46, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **See comments below. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:32, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) My objection is in direct opposition to the above objection. Rebellion does not state or suggest in any way that any type of species named "boosqueak" is somehow a separate species from the folded ear boosqueak. The entry reads: "Fedje is host to many forms of exotic arboreal lifeforms including the rare folded ear boosqueak." "Boosqueak" should simply be a redirect to "Folded ear boosqueak," or vice versa, depending on what you think is the best title. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:32, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Ah, I was unaware of that. If that's all the source says, then I agree with Toprawa. I would say folded ear boospueak would be the better name. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:32, September 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Nack Movers

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:08, August 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: 197 words

(2 ECs/0 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash;  17:28, August 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:36, September 1, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Whatcha cryin' for?
 * 2) * Not sure if "heavyset" is necessary in the intro?&mdash; 23:26, August 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Removed.
 * 4) * Context on Coruscant in intro and possibly the bio.&mdash; 23:30, August 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Both contexted.
 * 6) * Is "powerful" needed in the intro, in describing the fact he was a murderer?
 * 7) **Changed to something that describes him better.
 * 8) * Link Death in the intro.
 * 9) **Linked.
 * 10) *Good stuff, Lee.&mdash; 23:30, August 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 08:59, August 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Jujiggum
 * 13) * Do we have an article for his apartment?
 * 14) **Created.
 * 15) ***If the apartment belonged to his girlfriend, then shouldn't it be Ione Marcy's apartment? Also, the intro right now says that the entire complex belonged to Marcy; not just the one apartment. Is this true? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:10, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ****Fixed and moved.
 * 17) *****Please be very careful when moving articles&mdash;the name you moved it to had an incorrect spelling, and thus it had to be moved again, meaning I had to go and fix several double redirects. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:46, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) * "he bought a lightsaber from the Patrolian Bannamu and took it to his apartment in a condominium complex and to his girlfriend Ione Marcy." Hmm, not really following your meaning here. Do you mean he gave the lightsaber to Marcy? That he specifically took it to her? Please check this.
 * 19) **Fixed.
 * 20) * Is the phrase "hatchet man" actually used to describe him during the episode? If so, this should probably be included in the P&T, too.
 * 21) **Not really, he is said to be an assassin and therefore he is a hatchet man.
 * 22) ***Then this part of the intro is redundant. You just said he was an assassin, so why do you need to say so again? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:10, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ****Removed.
 * 24) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 20:12, August 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:32, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) * One more thing: does the source specifically say he was a strong and dangerous murderer? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:10, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) **Sinube states both that Movers is a dangerous one in the Underworld and notes that he was "stronger then many other people.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:35, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) *Please add more quotes to the article. I am certain there is one spoken by Marcy or Cryar about him or his death (even if it is one of their lies), and perhaps Sinube's statement about his strength could go in the P&T. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:46, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) **Because I cannot add the English version myself I asked JMAS.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:10, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ***Added one quote.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:15, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) ****Is there no other one where they refer to him more specifically? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:56, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) *****JMAS wants to add it soon. Meanwhile I search a little bit myself.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:08, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) ****** Okay, also, please check the sentence that was just added to the article, verify it, and make sure its placement is appropriate. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 18:34, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) *******Checked and removed unverified info.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:28, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) Hey hey, you you
 * 36) *Just making it a formal objection --- the intro still contains the unverified "girlfriend". Menkooroo 12:33, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 37) **Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:38, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 38) ***It's still there. --Eyrezer 22:16, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 39) Lawn mowers
 * 40) *The intro is three rows while the body is five+four words. Please cut down on the intro.
 * 41) *That he resided in the apartment is intro-only.
 * 42) *Context on Ione Marcy in the body.
 * 43) *Airdate for Lightsaber Lost?
 * 44) *I'm sure there are more applicable categories.
 * 45) *-- 1358  (Talk) 14:58, September 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * This would probably be best on the talk page, but how do we know Ione Marcy was Nack's girlfriend? Last I checked, we had no idea who his girlfriend was.--''' Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal! ) 16:40, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * As it was her aparment, she had to be his girlfriend. Or do you think he goes to another apartment.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:08, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * People of different sexes are roommates all the time. If there's no source identifying them as dating, then the article can't make that assumption. Menkooroo 14:03, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Removed unverified info.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:26, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Not from the intro you haven't! :^P Menkooroo 05:04, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Just to clarify --- nothing about him in the TCW Character Encyclopedia? If he's even mentioned in Ione's entry, it needs to go in the source list. Menkooroo 01:17, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nothing in the TCW CE.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:02, September 6, 2010 (UTC)

Flanker

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:07, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Former GAnom

(0 ECs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object
 * 1) Cav:
 * 2) *Some context on the problems Shiv faced on Orto Plutonia is needed, especially as to why he was killed by Talz warriors. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:05, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Contexted a little bit.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 09:58, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Jujiggum
 * 5) *"despite this, Shiv wrote letters to Flanker since it relaxed him." "Him" who? Flanker or Shiv? (I realize it's obviously Shiv, but this is poorly worded)
 * 6) **I'm not seeing the connection between these two things. How is Shiv being relaxed by writing letters something that is in spite of Flanker's death? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:58, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * The last sentence of the bio contains too many relative terms (i.e. when, shortly after) making the overall chronology difficult to follow.
 * 8) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 00:14, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Both fixed. Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:47, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Does it matter to Flanker's article that Shiv was killed "when the Republic troops were caught in the middle of a fight between the Talz and Confederate droids"? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:58, September 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Laser Company

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:51, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And this time novelization is not italicized

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Menkooroo 13:28, August 31, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Cav:
 * 2) *Can we have an article for the Kessel mission?
 * 3) **Created.
 * 4) *Is there anything about Checkers reason for transferring out of Laser Company? I seem to recall he mentioned having no ill feelings towards Master Fisto. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:08, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Yep, but why he transfered is already stated. (To serve under 7567). Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:03, September 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * More of a question than an objection --- how much info is given on the encounter on Kessel? Is it identified as a battle with the Seps, ie, is there enough info to warrant an article on it? Menkooroo 13:19, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * No there is no more info in the novel.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 13:27, August 31, 2010 (UTC)

Battle of Altyr V

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 12:48, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Never done a battle before...

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 23:19, August 31, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Karika
 * 2) * Body: The Jedi General you mentioned in the infobox should get a link in the body.
 * 3) **He is linked line two a.
 * 4) * BTS: The BTS claims the battle was first mentioned in the CSWE, but the Sources are Star Wars Insider.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 13:37, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Fixed. Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:06, August 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Jujiggum
 * 7) *Any reason you write out Bly's full number but not Deviss'?
 * 8) **Eh, I meant that you should write out both of their full numbers. Remember, in CAs without full bodies, the "intro" is treated as the body of the article. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) *"&hellip;the Republic forces stumbled." Hmm, is there a better word you can use here? His just doesn't seem very natural for the situation.
 * 10) **Just a quick question about this: "&hellip;the Republic forces halted their advance." Do you mean the Republic forces decided to stop their advance due to the death of the Jedi? If so, then you can keep this as is. But if you mean that the Separatists stopped the Republic advance following the Jedi's death, then this needs to be reworded. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) * Remember: do not use "unidentified" or "unknown" in the infobox.
 * 12) * Did the battle really take place over the course of three years, as you currently suggest in the infobox?
 * 13) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 00:20, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *Also: please put in the full infobox&mdash;just because you don't use all the fields doesn't mean you should just delete them from the article. Hide/ignore the ones you don't need as applicable, but don't delete them form the article. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:23, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **All fixed. Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:40, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ***The last one also remains; you have made absolutely no changes to the infobox structure whatsoever. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:08, September 9, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Folded ear boosqueak

 * Nominated by: Eyrezer 01:53, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: None

(0 ECs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object
 * 1) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 2) *Can you clarify the BTS note? It sounds like the Imperial agents were inspired by the in-game encyclopedia of Rebellion, but I'm guessing you mean that Zahn was inspired? ~ SavageBob 13:55, September 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Shift shield

 * Nominated by:Darth Morrt 08:38, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:None

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) A goody from the first ever published SW thing ever. Menkooroo 15:10, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Objecting
 * 2) * Please give the article a heavy copy-edit and fix the grammar. There's some missing punctuation, too.
 * 3) *Source the main quote.
 * 4) *Through pipelinking, make sure you don't link to redirects --- eg, shield rather than shield.
 * 5) *Speculation should be avoided --- ie, "it is possible" in the bts. Menkooroo 01:23, September 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **Done. Thanks to TopAce for the grammar help. Darth Morrt 11:46, September 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * A couple more: Give context on Darth Vader and the 501st.
 * 8) *The "History" section should be reworded so that the Tantive IV is mentioned earlier. Right now, the article references "the shift shields". ... Which ones? Menkooroo 05:12, September 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Done. Darth Morrt 09:32, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Jujiggum
 * 11) * You make it sound in the itnro as if Vader actually believed that's what destroyed the ship. Please make it more clear that that was the story that he wanted the Senate to believe.
 * 12) * In the Hisory, please give a little context on the Tantive IV and its destruction.
 * 13) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 00:30, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **Done. Darth Morrt 09:32, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) *The last sentence of the BTS&mdash;"The function of these shields was similar to particle shields or concussion shields, which were mentioned in later sources."&mdash;needs to be sourced, as it is not self-sourcing. If you give the source for even just two sources that say that about particle shields, that should cover it. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:26, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Lohjoy

 * Nominated by:  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 00:33, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: (L)oh joy!

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Reverend Lohjoy. Menkooroo 15:36, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) I think you can add a fair amount of context to this, Ie, you currently don't even mention the war Lohjoy was involved in. Does it give a skin color for Lohjoy? Not all Ho'Din are green. --Eyrezer 22:20, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added context. Nope, it doesn't give a skin color.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 22:57, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Is it Omen or "The Omen"? The article flip-flops. Menkooroo 15:14, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *It's just Omen. Corrected.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 15:17, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Taloron language

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 23:15, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The word of the day is "Soknar."

(1 ECs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:41, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Savage Bob has written Soknar great articles since joining this site. Menkooroo 04:05, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * "The language is first mentioned" comes off as a bit odd. I know that present tense is OK when dealing with only one source, but I don't know about "is first". Sticking with past tense might look nicer, especially since there are a couple of other past tense references earlier in the bts. Menkooroo 15:20, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * Yeah, I try to stick to present tense for BTS, but publication dates and such make it sound wonky sometimes. I've switched the is to was in this instance. Thanks for the review; I'm glad you didn't have Soknar objections! ~ SavageBob 16:34, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Umaren'k'sa

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 04:23, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Wannabe Hemes Arboras.

(1 ECs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support Object
 * 1)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:55, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Jinzler 00:27, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Menkooroo 15:24, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Graekus Shubelle

 * Nominated by:  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 22:40, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part 1

(1 ECs/1 Users/2 Total)
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 * 1) The Holodeck operator of Star Wars! ~ SavageBob 16:40, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 17:01, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Jujiggum
 * 2) * A couple minor grammar issues.
 * 3) * You could definitely add a short P&T.
 * 4) * Tense shifting in the BTS.
 * 5) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 22:43, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **Addressed.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 23:01, September 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * One more: "Graekus Shubelle was, in the years prior to the beginning of the Clone Wars, the administrator of Hologram Fun World." This is completely unfounded. All the source says is that he was the administrator in 22 BBY; it says nothing about him being the administrator in the years leading up to then. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:33, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **Fixed.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 15:47, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Very nitpicky, but the term "recession" is most commonly defined as 2 quarters of consecutive negative growth. This isn't stated in the Holonet article, and should be changed. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:59, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

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 * I think I may have reintroduced the tense shifting Jon mentioned, but I think it's correct in this case. Since the HNN article he appears in still exists, we should describe his appearance there in the present tense in an OOU sentence. I won't cry if it gets changed back, though. ~ SavageBob 16:40, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nope, your change is fine; the problem before was that the tense shifted present to past within one sentence. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 17:01, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

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 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:05, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Moving on to the droids.

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 * 1) ~ SavageBob 16:36, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:06, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;  08:19, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

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Unidentified pirate captain (Zekk)

 * Nominated by: Menkooroo 05:51, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yo-ho

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 * 1) Uh huh&hellip;&mdash;  08:17, September 12, 2010 (UTC)

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