Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Boba Fett and the Assassin Droids

Boba Fett and the Assassin Droids

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:55, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Let's rock!

Support

 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:49, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Heh.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:26, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Imperialles 11:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Good work. -- 1358  (Talk) 14:55, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

Toprawa:

 * You currently link and reference to the GG6 disambig page. Please specify first and/or second edition. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:32, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:22, May 17, 2010 (UTC)

Xd

 * Could you merge the two youmay templates? -- 1358  (Talk) 14:58, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Like this? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:00, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * In the intro, you say that Boba Fett did not care about the band, however, in the "Organization" section, you state that experts believed that he would not care. Please decide which one is correct.
 * Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * That's it. -- 1358  (Talk) 17:19, May 17, 2010 (UTC)

A few things:

 * Alien is a humanocentric word; might be better to simply use the term "non-Human"
 * Let's say organic non-Humans to avoid confusion with droids, if you will. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Intro: "Boba Fett and the Assassin Droids was an underground musical group named after a famous bounty hunter and an illegal technology" This sentence presumes prior knowledge of both Fett and assassin droids. Reword it to something like "named after the bounty hunter Boba Fett and assassin droids, considered an illegal technology by the Galactic Empire." That way, you also eliminate the ugly links in the bolded part.
 * Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Intro: "in a vain attempt to stop them." Unsuccessful is probably a better word than vain in this context.
 * Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * History: "to be too dangerous for broadcasting." Dangerous how? Politically? Clarify.
 * Changed; this is all the OS specified. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * --Imperialles 17:30, May 17, 2010 (UTC)