Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Suu


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Suu

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 21:32, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: There is no better pun than "Made you Luuke." I refuse to try.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Great job. &mdash;Jawaman 15:15, March 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:13, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 05:38, April 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) See my comment below. -- 1358  (Talk) 04:35, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:01, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Excellent. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:28, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Trayus does the damn thing ;) —Tommy  9281 21:18, April 28, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) * "While he was away, the war came to Saleucami when the Republic's hunt for&hellip;" Somewhat nit-picky, but you use to separate relative timing devices here: "while he was away" and "when the Republic's hunt;" leading to some confusing as to the overall chronology.
 * 3) **I tweaked it a bit. Give it a look and let me know what you think.
 * 4) * Please specify in the bio that Rex was planning to report Cut's defection. As is, you don't really say so until Suu asks whether or not Rex still intends to report Cut.
 * 5) **Specfied.
 * 6) * How exactly was Suu "strong?" (i.e. do you mean "physically strong?")
 * 7) **Specified.
 * 8) *Well done. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:19, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 20:08, April 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * There are a few instances where I refer to "Cut" instead of "Lawquane" or some fitting pronoun. This is because if I were to use "He," "the trooper," or "the human," it could also be in reference to Rex, and if I were to constantly use "Lawquane," you would want to gouge your own eyes out before getting to the P&T. For the most part, I don't use his first name without first using his surname elsewhere in the sentence, so it's not horribly unencyclopedic, and far more condusive for the purposes of clarity and non-repitition. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 21:32, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure if her era can be referenced to the episode. Several other TCW FAs and GAs use The Clone Wars novelization as a source for the era, as it also provides the year. -- 1358  (Talk) 16:12, April 16, 2010 (UTC)