Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Hetton


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1) As nominator - I've overhauled this article massively, and i think it could be worth becoming a GA, so what the hey, I'm throwing it ou there. Any takers? Darth Xadún 11:09, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I've spruced it up a bit, and it probably needs a bit more, but I say take it to FA, man! Thefourdotelipsis 10:24, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Good stuff! —Tommy9281 ( Lússë i Morë Hwesta súya! ) 15:33, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Poor guy...he chose the wrong side.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:17, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "Hetton was related to the Demici family, one of the Great Houses of Serenno." This starts off a little suddenly. Start with a sentence about who he is. Hetton was a Human male who was...
 * 3) **Changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Does he actually say he’s 59 is Rule of Two? I don't remember.
 * 5) ** No actual dates are used, although some can be worked out. I've removed all unconfirmable dates, including birth. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Organization, not organisation. Same with meagre, it's meager here. Also, spell realized with a z.
 * 7) **Sorry. Usign British spellings and all that. changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Pipe link "their near-total destruction at Ruusan" to Seventh Battle of Ruusan.
 * 9) ** Changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * "...believing her to have revealed the planned assassination of former Supreme Chancellor Tarsus Valorum." I think this would make more sense if you added a few more words. It needs better context.
 * 11) ** I've added a sentence here. Does that look better? Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Dark Side is not capitalized.
 * 13) ** Changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Link things once in the introduction and once in the body.
 * 15) ** I thought you only linked the first reference to a linkable article? Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * Could we get a main quote?
 * 17) **I've added one I feel to be a rarther pertenant quote to the Star Wars universe in general. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * Artifacts, not artefacts.
 * 19) ** Changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * "A lot of people disagreed with the laws passed by the Republic Sena..." Please rephrase. A lot is not an encyclopedic term.
 * 21) ** Changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * "...ensured the Anti-Republic Liberation Front to be one of the largest and most prominent rebellious groups..." Perhaps change "the" to his newly created...
 * 23) ** Changed. Darth Xadún 08:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) *There you go. Work on this, and the article will be much improved. Also, strive for FA status. Once it's passed GA, I recommend you take it to FA.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:04, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) From Tommy9281:
 * I think it's a great article, I just have two points&mdash;first, when referring to someone as a "Master" or as someone's "Master", the word master should be capitalized.
 * Ok, Changed. Darth Xadún 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Second, Zannah didn't use Force insanity, she used Sith sorcery. I would change the pipelink & the sentence a little to reflect this. Otherwise, this is a good read! —Tommy9281 ( Lússë i Morë Hwesta súya! ) 21:26, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes......I've mentioned this on the talk page for Sith Magic. I'm really not keen on the concept of "magic" and "sorcery" within Star Wars. I think they're merely laments terms or alternate names for Force Powers - See my comment here. A good example is the Witches of Dathomir who believed they were casting spells when in fact using the Force. But that's unrelated to the nomination. For accuracy with the source I've changed the link to Sith magic. Darth Xadún 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments


 * Please format your nomination correctly next. Copy and pasting works nicely. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I think that with a bit of tweaking here and there, this could actually make Featured article status. If the nominator is OK with doing a bit more work in addressing inevitable objections, that's my recommendation. It certainly reaches the length requirements. Thefourdotelipsis 23:33, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I thought you needed images for an artical to be a FA? Otherwise I would have suggested it for FA status in the first place. I don't know of any canonical images I could use for it. Darth Xadún 07:21, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * No, you don't need any images at all. At most, someone might ask you to put in an image of Zannah or something in the main body. Thefourdotelipsis 09:21, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Please don't strike others objections.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:04, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Sorry. Thought I was meant to after completing them. I'll know for next time :) Darth Xadún 08:09, 22 April 2008 (UTC)