Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Pau'an


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:07, 29 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Keep'em comin. —Tommy ( There are no Jedi here ) 21:41, 5 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) More alien spcies GA's!!!  Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 08:50, 16 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 19:16, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 03:41, 19 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) By the looks of things, you've missed this Wizards source: Saga Edition Web Enhancement: The Pau'ans. There is also BTS info in the article on Star Wars that I added to the sources section. --Eyrezer 11:54, 30 May 2008(UTC)
 * 2) *Added. Thanks for the sources. There was not much BTS info though; most of it is better suited to Medon rather than the species.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:21, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **You seem to have added info to the article without adding refs. Ie, the 57,000 year date is in the Wizards source, yet to that paragraph you've only added an EpIII reference. Furthermore, the referencing has only been done at the end of the paragraph, not the particular fact. Finally, the sourcing abbreviations need to be shortened. --Eyrezer 22:36, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Stupid of me. Fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:50, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) The BTS also seems rather patchy and short. --Eyrezer 22:37, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *How is it now?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:33, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **Better. --Eyrezer 23:09, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) The Anvil:
 * 9) * Just one thing...I don't think the lead quote is appropriate. I know it's from Episode 2, but it doesn't relate to the species other than being what Obi-Wan said to one of them. I'd just remove it, if none others are available. —Tommy ( Clean face and hands ) The Anvil 22:40, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **I'll go through the ROTS novel and see if I can find a better one, but a lead quote is important, so I'd like to keep this one if a better one cannot be found.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:50, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Important, but not essential for GA. This quote is circumstancial - it doesn't reference anything to the Pau'an people. If you find a better one, it can always be added later. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 07:54, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ****I've got no problem with that quote... --Eyrezer 23:09, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *****I've seen other GAs with poor quotes. I've checked several sources, and have found no better quotes. I'll keep looking but I don't expect to find anything. If anyone has one, please add it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:34, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ******I'm fine with it also, no big whoop. And I agree with you Chack, I've seen some with poor quotes too ;) —Tommy ( There are no Jedi here ) 21:41, 5 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) Finally, given that the Wizards article is over 3,000 words, and this one is only 800 I suspect there is still plenty of info missing from the article. --Eyrezer 22:42, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *I think I just compressed it more, but I'll go through the article again and look for any missing info, and try to expand what I can here.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:50, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **Expanded it last night. Should be much more comprehensive now.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:28, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) Could you get a mention of Lampay Fay in there? A mention of needing the CSA to intervene and stop the massive recruitment of Pau'ans would be good. A mention that the species that moved there was likely from a destroyed world. A mention of the rumor that Utapau was the original homeworld of the Jedi. You can also flesh out a bit more about the city states and the way they tried to keep apart. Could mention more about the Empire taking over: the Wizards article has at least a paragraph on it. Mention the subsequent resistance movement. A bit more in the Society section on the planetary council and how it meets together, as well as that Port Administrator was the leader of the cities. The 99% figure re the wind power. No mention of liking art works. Also a bit more context re the Trade Federation embargoes. It's all there in the Wizards article. Comparision with Caamasi would be good. More on how Imperials treated the advisers.
 * TL:DR version - still needs to be expanded. --Eyrezer 07:10, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Expanded, I think. What does TL:DR mean?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:27, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **That one confused me at first too. Stands for "Too long, didn't read". --Eyrezer 05:57, 24 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Another NEGAS nom.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:07, 29 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Eyrezer: thanks for the review. Because of your in-depth critique, I believe this article is now ready for FA after it passes GA.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:27, 2 July 2008 (UTC)