Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Borvo the Hutt's starfighter


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Borvo the Hutt's starfighter

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 23:17, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Cannon fodder

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) NAYA   YEN   18:59, September 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) * Just one: "...and starfighters had a small cross-section" Eh? Even if you put "the" in there, it still sounds odd. Reword? NAYA   YEN   23:27, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) **I put "profile" instead. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Just at first glance, the intro could use a slight expansion.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:04, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Too much? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:22, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Maybe cut it down a tiny bit, but not a whole lot. Also, please make the first sentence less redundant. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 01:27, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Done. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:54, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Jujiggum's full review
 * 8) * Please change the beginning of the History and/or Characteristics section, since they start the same exact way.
 * 9) **Mixed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) * You say "several missions" but you only link one mission.
 * 11) **More added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) ***I've been thinking about this, and I think a better way to do it would be to say "&hellip;several missions, including&hellip;" And then list a few missions separately. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 21:23, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) ****Sure, links moved. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:38, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *****Okay, but please check your grammar here. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:47, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) ******Conjunctions added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:07, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * "Other starfighters" This isn't clear whether you mean some more of this particular class of fighter or a completely different type of starfighter.
 * 17) **Additional. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) * "destroying or driving off the starfighters" Just a slight wording issue: this sounds like we don't know which happened, whereas I believe you mean that some were destroyed while some were driven off.
 * 19) **Reworded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * "his personal starfighter" Which his? Sykes' or Kotha's? (Yeah, I know you mean Kotha's but the wording here isn't very clear)
 * 21) **Fixed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) ***"and continued to fly in his personal starfighter as Sykes' wingmen" Huh? Do you mean wingmate? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 21:23, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ****Hmn. I guess I should not have transposed the link/pipe. Fixed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:12, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) * I don't believe you should have the complement section filled in the infobox; that is for the vehicles/ships/troops that a ship can carry. And since these starfighters have only one pilot&hellip; That said, you also need to fill in the "Crew" section of the infobox.
 * 25) **Taken care of. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 15:39, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) You need a sources section, as well as references in the infobox and text.--  ID-21 Dolphin  DolphinJedi.png(Talk) 20:10, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) *Nope; per WP:S, "Articles with only one source or appearance may be sourced, although it is not required." Furthermore, the starfighter appeared only in the video game, which is an "appearance," not a "source," so no Sources section is necessary (unless you can name a source in which this starfighter appeared). Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 20:19, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) **Oh, well. I added the refs; and no sources, as the starfighters appear in neither the instruction manual nor the CSWE. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) *** Objection(s) overridden by EduCorps 10:16, October 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) You are currently at 263 words, so the article is no longer eligible for CA status, I'd suggest taking this to the GAN. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 22:23, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) *Noted, but do you think it could be a GA as it stands? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:16, October 14, 2010 (UTC)

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