Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Ho'Din Covenant Shadow


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Unidentified Ho'Din Covenant Shadow

 * Nominated by: Eyrezer 11:08, August 16, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A Covenant Shadow, in case the title was not clear...

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 22:40, August 16, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  12:50, August 17, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) ~ Savage  BOB sig.png 12:52, August 29, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:21, September 17, 2011 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Exiled Jedi
 * 2) * Could you make it clear that Celeste Morne was a Covenant Shadow? The way it is now you can't tell if she is a Shadow or something else. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  12:20, August 16, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) *Done. --Eyrezer 20:07, August 16, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) "...the Jedi Covenant, a secret organization that existed to predict and prevent the return of the Sith, an order of dark side users, following their defeat at the Great Sith War." An apositive within an apositive is a run-on sentence.  NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:30, September 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) *Say what, now? --Eyrezer 11:42, September 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 6) **That's a run-on sentence; ergo, it's grammatically incorrect. You explain what the Jedi Covenant is with the first apositive ("a secret organization...") and within that aside you explain what the Sith is with another apositive ("an order of dark side users...") Basically, it looks like this: "Jedi Covenant, a secret organization that existed to predict and prevent the return of [the Sith, an order of dark side users,] following..." and that overlap shouldn't happen. Rephrase it. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:12, September 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Should be fixed now. --Eyrezer 20:35, September 15, 2011 (UTC)

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