Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/The Clone Wars: Headgames


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The Clone Wars: Headgames

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:31, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Damn you, Kilson :P

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 13:48, 6 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Damn me?! Thanks for doing this, Jinn. Kilson Likes PIE 20:11, 06 August 09 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 17:20, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) I'd still like to see you pay closer attention to minor punctuation details, QuiGonJinn. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:33, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:39, 30 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) You're killing me:
 * 2) * "The Clone Wars: Headgames is a six-page web comic in The Clone Wars web comic series posted on StarWars.com on January 15, 2009." – Tense shift is killing me.
 * 3) **I think it's fine, actually.
 * 4) ***Objection will sit here until fixed. Graestan ( Talk ) 22:51, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Fine, fixed. But it would be nice to have some consistency with such articles. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 10:44, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *****Feel free to fix the poor tense shift in the other articles, then. This is English 101 here, Rule 1 at the top of this page: "well-written." Note I didn't look at those other articles. Graestan ( Talk ) 12:44, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * "On a planet" opening is killing me.
 * 8) **Fixed. I guess it's OK to use "unidentified" in OOUs
 * 9) ***That is correct. Graestan ( Talk ) 22:51, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * "discover what secrets it might hold" verbatim twice is killing me.
 * 11) **Rewored one in the bio.
 * 12) * Five ref tags to illustrate a point that two would support is killing me.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * Behind-the-scenes needing organization and single-sentence paragraph are killing me.
 * 15) **For the first part, see above. The second is fixed.
 * 16) ***See above? As in what? Organize it; it's in bits and pieces with zero flow. Graestan ( Talk ) 22:51, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) ****I don't really understand what kind of "flow" do you expect. All previous web comic GAs followed the same concept with BTSes, which is, basically:
 * 18) *****a)Explain that it is a web comic.
 * 19) *****b)Say which episode it ties into.
 * 20) *****c)Talk about the TCW elements it introduces. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 10:08, 8 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ****Nevertheless, I've merged two of the sentences together to, hopefully, make it flow better, but that's all I can think of. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:28, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) *****Here's what I am looking for, basically, in terms of information organization:
 * 23) ******a) What it is, what it ties into, and who made it.
 * 24) ******b) What happens in it.
 * 25) ******c) Miscellanea like the Easter egg.
 * 26) *****There doesn't really need to be a separate "Development" section. Just maybe two total paragraphs, one pertaining to the OOU information and one pertaining to the actual content of the subject (including the Easter egg). Graestan ( Talk ) 01:32, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) ******Hopefully addressed now. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 15:27, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
 * :P Graestan ( Talk ) 01:34, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * :P :P :P QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 09:25, 7 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Though this may be a little late in the game, I would still encourage the people writing these TCW OOU articles to inclue Major character sections. If you ever decide to do so, take a look at the TOTJ article for how this is done. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 20:02, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * The thing is, TOTJ is a long series the events of which span the most part of its characters' lives. And the "major characters section" in the TOTJ article basically sums up these events for each character. The events depicted in this comic, however, are just a very minor part of say, Aayla's or Bly's life. Therefore, the "major characters section" in this case would have lots of information that has no relevance to the comic whatsoever. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:29, 15 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Yes, I understand why someone wouldn't think it a good idea because of that, but its more about their part in the event than their life itself. As TOTJ does cover their lives, it makes it seem like each character's entire life should be summarized but that is not the case. It is a summary of their part in the events of the comic, or other piece of media, with only minor things otherwise. A Major characters section should only cover this specific event in this case, also saying that Aayla was a Twi'lek Jedi Knight of the Jedi Order who served as a Jedi General during the Clone Wars of course. It should not say that she had a breif spat with with the dark side, had a possibly scandelous relationship with Kit Fisto, that she died at the hands of Bly, etc. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 06:01, 16 August 2009 (UTC)