Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Keshiri


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Keshiri

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 02:20, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first ever species nom; a Legacy/Aliens crossover, from Lost Tribe & Fate of the Jedi

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Thanks for the crossover! --Eyrezer 22:05, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *No prob&mdash;it was fun; I'll probably be doing some more species articles in the future :) Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 23:00, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice job! ~ SavageBob 00:32, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:06, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:01, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:04, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:49, November 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) Dammit Kasra & the Edit conflict ;) —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 22:17, November 7, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Two small points. According to the Atlas Online Companion, Kesh is in Wild Space, not the ORT. Which is correct? With regard to the Great Hyperspace War, I don't think it is accurate to say the rest of the galaxy was razed by it. From what I understand, it was a lot more limited than many other galactic conflicts. --Eyrezer 13:18, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *It seems I misread something: in Omen Rhea and Khai are in the ORT when they feel Skywalker's presence, however this was while they were abroad, working for the armada, rather than on Kesh. Both addressed; thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:53, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Prepare to be savaged..
 * 4) * Can you provide context for "uvak" on its first mention rather than later?
 * 5) *Otherwise, an excellent article. Glad to see an alien from you! ~ SavageBob 23:26, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Addressed; thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 23:55, October 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Grunny:
 * 8) * I'm easy on this, but in the first paragraph of "Society and culture" there are three sentences in close proximity that start pretty similarly: "The Keshiri believed that the Skyborn" "The Keshiri believed that the Skyborn" "As such, the Keshiri believed that the". Could you vary this a little?
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) *Just as a note, watch your comma use. When using a conjunction to join two thoughts into a single sentence, you should only use a comma if both parts of the sentence can stand alone and make sense as complete sentences. Otherwise, great job as always :). Grunny  ( Talk ) 13:25, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Noted; thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:19, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) A note from IFYLOFD:
 * 13) * One thing: "The Keshiri religion and government was led by the Neshtovar, who believed in the importance of tradition and religion above science and technological progress." A little context here: Is the Neshtovar one person, or a group? Other than that, good job.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:12, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) **Addressed; thanks for the review Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 23:17, October 23, 2009 (UTC)

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