Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Yo'gand's Core


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Yo'gand's Core

 * Nominated by: -- Harrar 14:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You left him. You left Chewie! Okay so I thought for my return I'd give y'all something a little different. Setting a mighty precedent for FAs on tactics, here we have Yo'gand's Core, the tactic that got R.A. Salvatore death threats. -- Harrar 14:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:33, 21 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Great read. Lord Hydronium 06:30, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 14:36, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Wow, did I learn a lot. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 15:48, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Fantastic stuff. Thefourdotelipsis 02:23, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --Eyrezer 01:40, 19 April 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Welcome back:
 * 2) * Just one thing. You have intro exclusive information (that bit about the age of the space station the Vong pulled down). You mention it predating the tactic by 10,000 years in the intro, but not in the body.
 * 3) **I removed it, a) because planets predated the tactic by a lot longer! and b) I don't have the NEGTV&V or the NEGTD (which is where the 15,000 years estimate for the Cremlevian War apparently comes from) and c) it's kind of showy and irrelevant. Cheers for the review :p! -- Harrar 01:21, 20 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *That's all I got. Great work, pal.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:36, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) As informative and interesting as the introduction is, I just think that it's a touch meaty. When it hits the main page, it'll be a massive chunk of text and...well, won't look so good. I think you can probably condense it a bit. Otherwise superb. Thefourdotelipsis 01:33, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Hi 4dot, good to have you back. I strimmed down the introduction heavily, making two shorter paragraphs. See what you think. -- Harrar 08:51, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) "The crew was able to study Dobido's descent patterns and estimate the location of the dovin basal."They didn't know what a dovin basal was at this point, right? If so, I suggest this should be changed to something like, "The crew was able to study Dobido's descent patterns and realized its orbit was affected every time it passed over a certain location. Along with the Mayor of Sernpidal City, Anakin Solo investigated, discovering the dovin basal and firing a shot at the creature..." Secondly, do we know the name of film Salvatore watched? --Eyrezer 01:51, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *In regards to the second question, I looked for it and asked around while doing research on Vector Prime, and I couldn't find anything that fit the description. - Lord Hydronium 02:15, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *I incorporated your suggestion Eyrezer, good point. With regards to the film, I spent time searching in vain. I'll keep an eye out for something like that but nothing matched the description as Hydro said. - —Harrar  [[Image:MR T.Lah.jpg|15px]] ( Villip ) 09:24, 18 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Okay so. First off, no infobox. I think the article needs one but I'm no Grunny and don't know how to pull one out of thin air! If a tactics infobox could be created, I have some ideas if you want to post on my talkpage.
 * If we did have an infobox, I think the image should be the one of Dobido on fire falling to the surface, from the comic, with Nom Anor and the speech bubble cropped out. It's already being used in the article as you can see. Any takers for the crop? I tried, but it's rubbish when it's that cropped. -- —Harrar  [[Image:MR T.Lah.jpg|15px]] ( Villip ) 11:21, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm looking to expand the BtS with more info, but I figured I'd put up what I have at the moment as it's satisfactory
 * One more thing&mdash;I went with Purpose, Features and History. If people have different suggestions, I'm all ears. -- Harrar 14:00, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
 * We now have a tactics infobox in place. Let me know if there are any new objections. Shout out to Grunny for making the box! -- —Harrar  [[Image:MR T.Lah.jpg|15px]] ( Villip ) 11:21, 17 April 2009 (UTC)