Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Mordon


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:16, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Imperialles 20:59, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 21:32, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Cull Tremayne 19:06, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:09, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:46, 25 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Two things:
 * 2) *"After a successful career, Mordon rose to the rank of admiral" His career ended before he became an admiral?
 * 3) *"allowed him to enjoy the solitude too often missing aboard a starship." POV.
 * --Imperialles 19:48, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Unless this is clearly substantiated in the game, consider removing this entirely: "Though details of his early assignments are unclear"
 * 3) * Brief descriptions of who Gwadj and Pargo are would be good: "Among those captured was a small Bordali transport, commanded by Gwadj and containing the captive Maarek Stele, along with his mother, Marina Stele, and Pargo."
 * 4) * This sentence reads awkwardly. The two "which's" don't fit well together, as well as the "on decades": "Mordon blamed the war which had ravaged their system on decades of neglect under the rule of the Galactic Republic's corrupt Senate, which had left their worlds with tattered economies and weak leadership."
 * 5) * Please elaborate on why this is apparent; damaged outer hull, for ex? "it would appear that the ship came under heavy attack on at least one occasion during this time."
 * 6) * Are there any indicators of how he was assassinated, specifically? Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:45, 24 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 19:24, 27 February 2008 (UTC)