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(3 Inqs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Yay for ESB articles. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:16, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash; Darthtyler http://images.wikia.com/swfanon/images/1/18/Scuba_Diver.gif Talk 01:25, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) About time an Inq read this. Brought to mind fond memories of reading ESB.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:32, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Forget the template, Ataru?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 02:07, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *How thoughtless of me. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:58, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Imperialles 22:48, 19 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:07, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * Un-italicize Darksaber Project. Actually, you'll have to do several time throughout the article.
 * 3) **Good catch. I had based the italics on a quote from Lemelisk, but it's clear after further review that it was meant for emphasis; and no other source italicizes it as far as I can see.
 * 4) * In the first paragraph of "Description", change "of a collision eons prior to the Galactic Civil War." It sounds repetitive, as you already used it in the intro.
 * 5) **Understood, but there is no other way to gauge the true age of the field. "Eons" is a very general term to describe, presumably, hundreds of millions of years. And no source gives anything more specific than "eons."
 * 6) ***Okay.
 * 7) * "known as exogorths, or colloquially called "space slugs." "Colloquially called" seems redundant.
 * 8) **I took out "or," since that was unnecessary, but remember that articles are written for the casual visitor to our site. How many people are going to know that an exogorth is a space slug?
 * 9) * "where they hoped to deliver the captive Dark Jedi, Alysun Celz, to the Jedi High Council. Kenobi and Skywalker were able to rescue the lone survivor, Et Rex, and detain Celz." It seems as though Celz and Rex survived, yet you call Rex the lone survivor.
 * 10) **Clarified.
 * 11) * In the second paragraph of Darksaber Project, link Delta and Gamma.
 * 12) **Linked, and linked Alpha and Beta for good measure. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:02, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *Refreshing.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:24, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 15) * Please remove "a virtual gold mine," or at least reword. It just sounds weird in a system that actual does export metal ore, but not gold.
 * 16) **Very true. Used a much more appropriate phrase.
 * 17) *The phrase "against all odds" is used a bit excessively in this article, particularly in regards to Solo. And it reminds one of Threepio's nattering.
 * 18) **Haha. Oh, Threepio!
 * 19) * "In fact, Solo had cleverly attached the Falcon to the backside of the Avenger's bridge tower, the last place he knew the predictable Imperial Navy would search." Bit of POVishness here.
 * 20) **Very POV. And bit of OR, to boot.
 * 21) * "distress signal transmitted from Madine's source through the HoloNet directly to the New Republic Defense Fleet prompted a response by a task force led by General Wedge Antilles." Madine's source? That's not what I recall.
 * 22) **A poor attempt at explanation. Reworded.
 * 23) * "Before the New Republic force could fully engage the Darksaber, however, the Hutt superweapon was obliterated between two massively sandwiching asteroids, killing Durga and creating yet more scattered debris among the field." IIRC, the superweapon was fully engaged and was getting pelted with turbolaser shots.
 * 24) **Fact. Reworded.
 * 25) *Excellent read overall. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:29, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) Someone added links to Alpha, Beta, Gamma, and Delta, which were disambigs. There are no specific pages for those units, so after specifying the links they are red. Unless I missed something when I was searching for those pages, this breaks rule 8. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:26, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) *Apparently, Mineral Exploiter Alpha, etc. are all redirects to Automated Mineral Exploiter. Cleaned up the redlinks. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:13, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 29) *Cannot a different image be found for the infobox? One of just the field itself?
 * 30) *Speaking of that image, its true origin needs to be noted in the source field.
 * 31) **Already done, thanks to Culator. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:10, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) *Thinly veiled atmospheres? How so?
 * 33) *Please expand your description of the mynock.
 * 34) *Extremely not keen on referring to the eras in articles. Not exactly IU.
 * 35) *That is all. Very nice BtS. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:36, 18 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Kudos to Muuurgh, Jaymach, and Culator for their assistance. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:16, 1 February 2008 (UTC)


 * It might just be me, but on the main image, the TIE Fighter looks a little weird being in the middle of the image like that. Perhaps you could get a better main image?&mdash; priceline negotiator [[Image:Priceline.JPG|20px]] 23:22, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * I concur. As with the rest, impressive sourcing!  Stake black   msg 23:36, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Ideally, I would like to have a picture showing the belt's ring from afar with large asteroids in the foreground. We had an image up there similar to what I'm describing, but it looked too dark and was framed through the Millennium Falcon's cockpit, and I disliked it, so I removed it. In any case, I feel the infobox image sums up the asteroid field quite nicely: it shows us some of the larger asteroids, it shows the belt's ring in the background, and the colliding ship represents what the field is best known for - a hazard to ships. For what it's worth, it's also the main pic for the SW.com Databank entry...I stole it. :P And, at any rate, a picture of just the belt itself does not exist. I did some extensive searching thru ESB. You're going to have a pic with a ship in it, and you might as well have it displayed prominently for effect.Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:48, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * I added a few new sources to the article. All the images were sourced. Not to sound too much like an English teacher, but watch the passive sentences. For example, instead of using a sentence like "Hoth was pummeled by asteroids," try "asteroids pummeled the surface of Hoth." —Xwing328 (Talk) 18:09, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks for additions, X-wing. And, coincidentally, I am an English major, and I know better...not that that's saying much for my passive voice right now! Blah! :P Will make the appropriate changes. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:41, 2 February 2008 (UTC)

(6 Inq/4 Users/10 Total)
Support
 * 1) More Wraiths.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:03, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:23, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash; Darthtyler http://images.wikia.com/swfanon/images/1/18/Scuba_Diver.gif Talk 01:25, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) What a butch... Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:50, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) More more more...Wraiths, that is ;)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:22, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Thought I did this already.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:34, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:30, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) Green Tentacle (Talk) 16:23, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 15:55, 19 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Should probably have a mention of her death in the intro. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 19:21, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added, thanks for the catch. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:01, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Few minor things
 * 4) * Intro: "Already a BTL Y-wing starfighter ace but with a record marked by insubordination, she was among the first to join Wraith Squadron in 7 ABY and was selected for her ground vehicle proficiency and was also skilled in flying TIE fighters and X-wings." Those two ands don't work well.
 * 5) **Thought I got that earlier; My mistake. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * There's at least one or two occurrences of a missing comma in the article, i.e. "a modified CR90 corvette allied with Trigit and Warlord Zsinj, the Night Caller arrived to investigate..." There should be another comma after Night Caller (I've checked with Gonk to make sure I'm correct).
 * 7) **I'm not sure if this was taken care of by someone else, but there is a comma there. Are there any other points needing commas? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Looks fine. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:23, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Correct me if I'm wrong, but wasn't Falynn one of those involved in covering up Donos's breakdown after Shiner's death? My memory's a little fuzzy on it, but if she was, it could do with a mention.
 * 10) **Falynn is not explicitly mentioned. Only Phanan, Tainer, and Sarkin are directly implicated, but I could add a brief nod. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ***No need if she's not mentioned. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 01:23, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Not an objection, but any chance of those redlinks becoming blue?
 * 13) **There is indeed a good chance of that. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:19, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * Again, not an objection, but at least one supporting picture wouldn't go amiss in the article, particularly one of Donos.
 * 15) **Picture of squadron crest added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:19, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *That's all. Nice article and an interesting choice. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:40, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) Toprawa says:
 * 18) * I may be mistaken about this, but if memory serves, the Pig Trough was likened to the Death Star trench run. I seem to remember Sandskimmer feeling she could beat Antilles in their run because of her experiences flying through Tatooine's canyons...on second thought, I may just be making this up...
 * 19) **A quick search of the book reveals that this passage does not exist. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * Rephrase this dead construction: "That was what the mission plan stored in Night Caller..."
 * 21) **Good point. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * Go through and reword some of the sentences that begin with "As such." You've got 4 in total, and it grows increasingly repetitive with each. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:40, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) **Reworded two of them. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) Minor wording problems:
 * 25) * "She was wont to disrespect authority figures for whom she did not respect..." Really?
 * 26) **How very silly of me. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * "often feeling overshadowed by the legacy of Tatooine native Luke Skywalker, often sought..." Repetition.
 * 28) **See above. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * "Antilles later showed her up" feels a bit like slang to me. Is there a better way to word it?
 * 30) **Changed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * Random aside: Wraith Three could use an article, or at the very least, a disambiguation between it's "users." —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:24, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) **Page created. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) ***You're speedy fixes are much appreciated. —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:50, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 35) * "Sandskimmer was selected for her ground vehicle proficiency and was also skilled in flying TIE fighters and X-wings." Please rephrase.
 * 36) * "In this engagement, Sandskimmer flew into the Star Destroyer's hull to attack it from within, but perished when she became entrapped inside, and the ship crashed into a moon." What hit the moon? Her ship, or the Destroyer?
 * 37) * The first paragraph in Bio reads awkwardly.
 * 38) * In Night Caller charade: "relieving Sandskimmer, who had not wanted to destroy the obviously amateur, green pilots." Repetitive.
 * 39) *Will finish reading it later.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:33, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) **So far, all addressed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:57, 6 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Wraith Squadron4.jpg is very low quality. I highly doubt this image has appeared in any official source. --Imperialles 22:06, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Ataru, make sure you always add "the" before the name of a ship. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:06, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Cleaned up three. Thanks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:13, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

(3 Inq/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) They told me to... -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:29, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) And rightfully so Harrar 22:09, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Is he part Chiss?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:42, 4 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:26, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:01, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:23, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:40, 15 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * You could reword this so it doesn't say "the Morgukai" twice..."A fierce and brutal warrior, Ma'kis became a decorated hero among the Morgukai, though after a decade of wearing the traditional armor of the Morgukai"
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) * Explain what is going on here. There is no previous mention of Makis holding any leadership position, just holding esteem among his people: "The sight of his former leader..."
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Avoiding using this sentence construction in consecutive sentences: "The Jedi fought with Vader, though Ma'kis'shaalas"
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * This is repetitive...a virtually identical clause to the one found in the previous sentence: "proving himself to be a keen and vicious fighter."
 * 9) **Reworded.
 * 10) * You make mention to the Burning Moon Range twice without really explaining what it is. Elaborate.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) * Elaborate on what he survived from, even though it's obvious. It helps to give the clause substance: "Ma'kis'shaalas had somehow survived"
 * 13) **Elaborated.
 * 14) * The way you introduce Tsyr as the new leader is kind of rocky. I would recommend creating a new sentence explaining this, and then go on to explain how he was not welcomed: "especially their new leader, Tsyr," Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:41, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **How about now? Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:03, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) ***Much better. Nice job, Acky. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:26, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 18) * Bit of POVishness in the first paragraph of Morgukai, as well as overuse of the word "warrior."
 * 19) **Sorted, I think. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:29, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * "Ma'kis was relocated from the Temple almost immediately after the briefing; he was stationed offworld when the order to kill their Jedi Generals came through the Grand Army of the Republic." Clarify this sentence please.
 * 21) **Clarified as much as I can. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:29, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) *Short, sweet, and to the point. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:41, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) "He did not forget his heritage, though, and tried to make amends with his fellow Nikto after attaining the rank of Jedi Master." Should that be Jedi Knight? Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:52, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) *Fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:29, 13 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

(1 Inqs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:57, 4 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:13, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:23, 19 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:08, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) Toprawa
 * 2) * This sounds cheesy: "Just after 4-LOM steeled himself to steal"
 * 3) * Forgot something here: "Zuckuss was able to tap into the of an old coral reef"
 * 4) * Reword this. Kind of weasely sounding: "the natives did not initially appear to"
 * 5) **This still sounds a bit confusing: "the natives did initially register him and allowed him to walk through their village unhindered."
 * 6) ***Hopefully better now -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:35, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Much better. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:13, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Reword so the "and's" don't become obtrusive: "managed to find much information on 12-4C-41 and was returning it to Jabba, and 4-LOM decided to ambush the hunter en route to Jabba's Palace"
 * 9) * You should probably reword this, unless its an IU axiom that his experiences are unknown; i.e., does the IU galaxy really not know his whereabouts, or is there simply nothing published covering this time? "4-LOM's exploits for this time period are unknown, though eventually, Zuckuss left the Guild to continue his career alongside 4-LOM"
 * 10) * You said earlier that the two were "friends." Which is it?: "the two had formed a bond of sorts"
 * 11) * I would rephrase this. His title was more of an honorary title. He held no real position in the Rebellion by 3 ABY: "Han Solo&mdash;now a high-ranking officer in the Rebellion&mdash"
 * 12) * Find the actual number. I think it was 26, or something. And also explain how they were restrained in the number they could take due to the amount of air on their ship. "take the two dozen or so Rebels aboard"
 * 13) * Was it not Rieekan? "A Rebel general"
 * 14) * I'm pretty sure it was the Redemption. You should specify: "During his stay on the Rebel ship,"
 * 15) * Check for me that the ship they are on is actually the "flagship" of the fleet. I'm not so sure: "on the Rebel flagship"
 * 16) * This is unnecessary: "Zuckuss believed his companion, though Skywalker's opinions on the prospects of such a phenomena occurring went undocumented"
 * 17) * Avoiding using this sentence construction in consecutive sentences: "Tagge's plot was foiled, though the two bounty hunters"
 * 18) * Avoid using "then," like this, the ultimate indicator of PBP: "4-LOM and his partner then joined up"
 * 19) * This description just seems out of place: "the former protocol droid made repairs to himself..."
 * 20) * This transition is kind of rocky: "4-LOM and the others were able to escape from their imprisonment and he continued capturing bounties, no matter how unethical his employers were."
 * 21) * Cheesy: "so that 4-LOM could be reactivated. Reactivated, 4-LOM helped"
 * 22) * Reword this empty construction. Not the best way to start off a new section: "It proved to be the last time"
 * 23) * Avoid saying things are unknown unless, again, it is a true IU axiom: "His further exploits are unknown"
 * 24) * Specify what this "thing" is: "the whole thing"
 * 25) *You've ordered the appearances list by way of 4-LOM's own involvement in each source. Make sure you reorder them to by way of chronological order in respect to the stories themselves, not the character.
 * 26) **Which ones are incorrect? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:36, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Also, the sources list is apparently not in correct order. GG10 was published before GG3? Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:42, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) **I fixed the most obvious cases but will check it thoroughly this evening. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:36, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * Make sure the source list in comprehensive. After adding two myself and now seeing that you don't have every Databank entry included, I'm getting the feeling some are lacking. Need to include Databank entries for Zuckuss, Duros and any others missing, as well as any info there might be in those entries. Also, make sure 4-LOM isn't mentioned in any Wizards articles. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:01, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) **I've added a few, but will check more thoroughly this evening. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:36, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) **All addressed, bar the ones I've commented on.-- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:36, 5 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) *** What remains to be done: Source list is still lacking at least one Databank entry. Go to SW.com and search "4-LOM" and you'll see what comes up;. Additionally, make sure you order the GG's by way of their second edition release. I know the second edition of GG3 came out in 1996, which I'm sure is after Movie Trilogy Sourcebook. Check on GG10, too. Appearances list is not in chronological order. I'm not sure about the others, particularly Galaxies, but IG-88's TBH story begins in something like 11 BBY, yet you have it listed per 4-LOM's involvement in 3 ABY. Check all. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:03, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) ****While 4-LOM for some reason appears in the excerpt of Duros in the DB when you search for him, he's not actually in the entry itself, so I've left that out. I've revised the sources section and it is in the right order, assuming the respective works' articles are correct. I've checked the appearances and made some minor moves, but it is in the correct order. As for the IG-88 thing, I conferred with Graestan in IRC, and he indicated that precedent is to have it where subject first appears. So I've kept that where it was. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:35, 7 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Again, Redemption has ordered Underworld and will reupload poor quality image. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:57, 4 February 2008 (UTC)
 * As I said above with Isard, the comic isn't printed all that great and so artifacts will be present. Nothing can be done about it. -- Redemption [[Image:Redemptionusersymbol.png|25px]] (Talk) 21:34, 11 February 2008 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/0 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Havac 09:07, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) The blood coming from my eyes after reading this is a price well paid :P  Greyman ( Paratus ) 21:04, 18 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * Reference 62 is broken. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:14, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fixed. Havac 18:16, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *"Horn's escape from Lusankya, not dead, cleared Celchu's name completely." Reword this, or at least do something with that "not dead" part.
 * 5) **Reworded. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 6) *"As they arrived, however, he was captured by storm commandos; he attempted to warn off the Rebels. Luke Skywalker, commanding the group, decided to go attempt a rescue." Reword this, it reads awkwardly.
 * 7) **Reworded. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 8) *The bit about Seerdon is speculation. Remove it unless sourced, and none of this "well, logically, he would have to be," reasoning. I want a canonical explanation.
 * 9) **It doesn't say anything not supported by canon. He was in the unit. The unit did something. It doesn't take a genius to put two and two together. No one's saying he was canonically for sure in it, just that he was in the unit in that time period and the unit did a thing. Battleground: Tatooine doesn't say he's romantically interested in Winter, either; it just shows him saying things which could be interpreted as hitting on her. We use our brains and come to a conclusion. This is less bold a leap than that because all I'm saying is fact 1 + fact 2 = probable but not guaranteed. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 10) *"The battle went well for the odds against them and the unit escaped, but Fett evaded the Millennium Falcon." Reword.
 * 11) **Reworded. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 12) *I hope for your sake that starfighter combat is linked here somewhere. Goodwood
 * 13) **It does. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 14) *"With the cover of the Rogues and the opportunistic intervention of Darth Vader's forces against his longtime rival Xizor, they were able to flee." Who is they?
 * 15) **"...Skywalker went to Coruscant to rescue her with Rendar and Calrissian. During their escape, Rendar..." What you quoted is the next sentence. I've defined they as Rebels to please you, though. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 16) *You're not even close to the Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day part. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:01, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **I didn't really expect to be. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 18) Imperialles's image objections:
 * 19) * Image:Celchu-Academy.jpg: This one should be obvious.
 * 20) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Image:Green3Unedited-ROTJHD.jpg: Distorted.
 * 22) **Blame ILM. That's straight from the best version of the film that's publicly available. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:41, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Bah! --Imperialles 21:42, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Image:Tycho Endor.JPG: Poorly scanned.
 * 25) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * Image:Tycho rescues Wes.JPG: Distorted.
 * 27) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * Image:HospitalofDeath.jpg: Covered with distortion.
 * 29) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Celchuunderattack.jpg: Some .jpg artifacts.
 * 1) * Image:Celchu-vs-Phennir.jpg: .jpg articacts.
 * 2) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * Image:Tycho-Masquerade.jpg: Scanning artifacts.
 * 4) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * Image:Tycho-funeral.jpg: Distorted.
 * 6) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * Image:Tycho-guns.jpg: Severely distorted.
 * 8) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Image:TychoCelchu swenc.jpg: Stretched out.
 * 10) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Tychomugshot.jpg: .jpg artifacts.
 * Image:TychoBilbringi.jpg: Quite distorted.
 * Image:BattleofLiinadeIII.jpg: Distortion.
 * Image:Celchu-B-wing.jpg: .jpg artifacts. Some cropping issues as well.
 * Image:Ushersofdeath.jpg: Artifacts.
 * Image:Celchu-Darklighter-Karrde.jpg: Artifacts.
 * Image:Tycho Celchu helmet.jpg: Poorly scanned.
 * Image:Celchu-cockpit.jpg: Artifacts.
 * Image:Tycho-kiss.jpg: Severe distortion.
 * --Imperialles 16:42, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Damn, I meant to mention in the comments . . . I've already asked Red to rescan these images. Though you're going to have to take up Culator's screenshot with him. Havac 18:16, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) First glance, "Antilles stayed behind to coordinate the attack until the last minute while Celchu made sure a shuttle was ready was for Antilles, who wifwhen contact was lost with Antilles."  -- "wifwhen"??? Who to the what now? I couldn't quite figure out what that sentence was actually supposed to say. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:17, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Redlinks. Darthchristian 16:18, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *And we should be under the limit now. Havac 00:10, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Would be the longest FA were it to pass. Uh, I mean, it's a really quick read and you should all read it quickly and support. It's no burden at all. Havac 09:07, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Holy crap. This thing is freaking huge. Spelling and redirects check out now, but I haven't checked for link redundancy yet, because the motherkriffer has 730 links. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:17, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Not an objection, Havac, but a little request. Would it be possible to put in links for more of the various battles Tycho fights in? Other than in the Thrawn campaign section, I couldn't find many. In the Confederation-GA War you could have the Battle of Centerpoint Station (Confederation-Galactic Alliance War), the Attack on Toryaz Station etc which atm are not linked, and major stuff like the Battle of Borleias in the Yuuzhan Vong War as well. Earlier on, the Battle of Liinade III isn't either. I hate to think of them being orphaned on Wookieepedia's virtual knowledge map. Also, to remove the Tawaler redlink, you need to put one in for Siron Tawaler. Have a good day. Harrar 14:57, 16 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) A non-ESB nom. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:48, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  15:09, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:09, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * In Assignment to Tatooine, you mention his one-in-a-million career. That sounds repetitive, as you already used a that phrase section earler. I know it was in a quote, but still.
 * 3) **Agreed. Reworded.
 * 4) * You refer to Han as an athletic-looking Human three times. Please change it.
 * 5) **Cleaned up. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:15, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Also, wasn't Greedo the "attractive" Rodian? If so, I suggest making a pipe link from male Rodian to Greedo.
 * 7) *Overall, excellent.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:47, 11 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * The infobox image is, admittedly, poor quality. It will be reuploaded. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:48, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * The Complete Visual Dictionary (p. 213) indicates that the part which was found by the stormtroopers on Tatooine was a metallic ring from one of 3PO's knee joints rather than something from an R2 unit. Maybe you could work this in somewhere. --Borsk Fey'lya  Talk 14:13, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Yes, very interesting. Good BTS info. Thanks, Borsk. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:42, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "When Felth heard a sudden scream emanate from a blockhouse not far from his position, he took the opportunity to break away from the sweep to interrogate the source of the disturbance. His search led him into a dimly lit cantina,[...]" I'm missing a mention of Garouf Lafoe here. He informed Felth and 1047 about Obi-Wan's lightsaber performance. (see ANH and Complete Locations) --Borsk Fey'lya  Talk 21:57, 11 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Yup, forgot that little tidbit. Added a Garouf mention. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:18, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Havac 05:01, 12 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Major props to you if you can next promote Havac to FA. ;)  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:22, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:41, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 11:22, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Imperialles 00:29, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:10, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * From "Aboard the Chaf Envoy": "Eventually, Fel heard the sound of a lightsaber being activated and took Aurek Squad to investigate." Change eventually to something else. It sounds reptitive. Plus, he didn't have to wait that long.
 * 3) **Fixed. Havac 18:46, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * In P&T:"willing to admit inexperience of lack of skill..." Should it be or?
 * 5) **Fixed. Havac 18:46, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *That's it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:10, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) From the Chron-o-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 8) * Outbound Flight (vessel) should be linked in there somewhere and any references to the ship, rather than the project, should be italicized accordingly. Likewise, shouldn't the individual Dreadnaughts' names also be in italics?
 * 9) *"Fel recruited the Jedi to use their lightsabers to scratch the conduit with her lightsaber and make sure it was not actually full of a flammable liquid before they cut it open to combat the fire." That doesn't make sense.
 * 10) *"With their comlinks jammed, Fel immediately began covering the monitor in the car while the stormtroopers scanned the patter of circuits around it." Patter?
 * 11) *"As Davin was the only Fel child of similar age to Chak, Lucas Licensing editor initially suggested that Chak was in fact Davin, with Chak being a nickname." Appears to be missing the editor's name. Green Tentacle (Talk) 11:51, 16 February 2008 (EST)
 * 12) **All addressed. Havac 18:17, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) "When, late in 4 ABY, Fel's father went missing during the Battle of Brentaal IV, his mother fled with him and Davin, fearing the retribution of Director of Imperial Intelligence Ysanne Isard, who disliked Soontir Fel." This bloated sentence could probably be improved. --Imperialles 22:55, 19 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Broken up. Havac 00:14, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 16) *Not enough background on Geroons. A teaspoon of context please.
 * 17) *4th paragraph of "Aboard Chaf Envoy" does not flow well and is rather choppy.
 * 18) *Lots of redundant and repeated information in this. For example, "his skill and role was in the cockpit of a clawcraft". A few lines up, we have "leading a fleet-arm of Nssis-class clawcraft. " and "Fel entered the pilot corps of the Empire of the Hand's fleet,". I think the reader gets the point that Fel flies clawcraft and even leads a wing of them; there's no need to harp on the idea. Then there's "Fel and the four stormtroopers serving as his bodyguard spent much of their time aboard their ship, docked within the Chaf Envoy, wishing to remain out of the way", followed by "Fel spent the next several days mostly aboard his shuttle". Are you that desperate for word count?
 * 19) *As was noted on the nomination for Fiolla, we don't need to know about every time Fel changes clothes.
 * 20) *Survivors (Outbound Flight) is not linked.
 * 21) *More clarification needed on who was in D-5. I might know this, but the reader might not.
 * 22) *"innocent children". Oh, not the children! POV.
 * 23) *I do believe that Survivors is capitalized throughout the text. Correct me if I'm wrong; correct the article if I'm not.
 * 24) *"Fel prepared an ambush"; "Fel planned to ambush." Variety is the spice of life; add a dash to these two phrases please.
 * 25) *Skills and abilities section preferred, as Chak does have notable skills, though the last paragraph of P&T is moderately acceptable for that purpose.
 * 26) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:54, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Come on, it's short. Read Tycho too and it'll average out. Havac 05:01, 12 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Havac 00:47, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:32, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * It does indeed come in over 1000 words. Havac 00:47, 13 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:03, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Uhh&hellip;kelp forest fever?  Graestan ( Talk ) 17:27, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) "She got jungle fever, she got jungle fever..." Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:35, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:32, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 2) * Not very keen on referring to Mon Cal and Quarren as amphibians; while technically true of the species' inclinations, the term points the casual reader towards the class of animals on Earth.
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) * Can we call her something besides the POVish "mediocre pilot?"
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) * The BtS is getting to where I feared self-sourcing would lead. "Stackpole used the character in the five successive story arcs" needs to be sourced somehow, because otherwise the reader is expected to just know.
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) * "Stackpole later reused in the novel"&mdash;Reused whom?
 * 9) **Fixed.
 * 10) * Graestan ( Talk ) 12:10, 15 February 2008 (EST)
 * 11) **Thanks for your input. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:20, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ***A fun read. Really a pleasure. Graestan ( Talk ) 17:27, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) Toprawa:
 * 14) * I'm too lazy to look this up myself, but link the appropriate system here. Endor system, or whatever it is. "drifting aimlessly through the system"
 * 15) * Unless I've missed it, you don't mention that she assumed the callsign Rogue Two after joining up with the squadron. Please do so.
 * 16) * This sentence is initially confusing without a previous explanation that while she had died, her death was not confirmed among the Rogues. Please add something to clarify: "When they returned to camp, Nrin threatened to kill Pestage if Ibtisam had died" Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:46, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **All addressed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 08:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Nice job, Acky. Good article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:35, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not a significant enough point to oppose on, but I think it should mention the meaning of her name in her native tongue, as defined by the Galactic Campaign Guide. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:24, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Done -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:06, 15 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Havac 23:48, 13 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:23, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 11:23, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:33, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) *This is rather POV. Please reword: "a quality not surprising in one raised among the strict Chiss"
 * 2) **Why on earth is that POV? She was raised among strict Chiss and, unsurprisingly, was capable of being disciplined and military. I don't get it. Havac 00:47, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) ***The objection is, admittedly, thin, but consider the other vantage point of someone perhaps thinking it is surprising, that after living among the Chiss she should have defiantly adopted an attitude opposite of their strict nature, for ex. At any rate, I feel it would serve better to say "a quality mirroring her upbringing," or whatever. Toprawa and Ralltiir
 * 4) ****Mirroring is just more awkward. It's not like people are going to have a hard time understanding the point of the sentence, and I think you're overanalyzing the whole thing. The sentence works fine. Havac 02:31, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * Avoid ending consecutive sentences the same way: "becoming familiar with much of the material stored there"
 * 6) **OK. Havac 00:47, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * This sentence is unnecessarily long and difficult to read. Please break it up and/or reword: "Her mother was briefly embarrassed by Fel's impertinence..."
 * 8) **OK. Havac 00:47, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Please remove this unknown: "though what Wynssa Fel's situation was at that time remains unclear" Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:12, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **If you're going to be that way. Havac 00:47, 18 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * And that's all the Fel kids. Havac 23:48, 13 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:16, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 11:29, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) With a name like Dani California... Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:29, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:33, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "infatuated with Rebel hero, Luke Skywalker Dani eventually joined the Alliance". I think you're missing a comma.
 * 3) **Right you are. Fixed. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * In "Beginnings", link Rik Duel.
 * 5) **Done. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * From "The Stenos operation": "Dani used the time to continue her obviously flirtation towards Skywalker" ly?
 * 7) **Slaps forehead. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * In Return of the Rebels: "Bossk, IG-88 and several other bounty hunters, who had set up their own carbon freezing chamber." Yet in the next sentence you say the two bounty hunters. Please clarify.
 * 9) **Not sure why I went with two there. Removed. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * From “Prisoners of the bounty hunters”: “they began to be assaulted by a barrage of spears.” Remove began.
 * 11) **Done. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Argo had been shot down by Imperials, eventually crashlanding on Lahsbane. There's no period at the end of the sentence.
 * 13) **Heh. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * The second paragraph in “Joining the Alliance” reads awkwardly.
 * 15) **Tweaked out the ugliness. Cull Tremayne 04:19, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * You use “however” too many times in the second-to-last paragraph of War.
 * 17) **Second "however" removed. Cull Tremayne 04:19, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * "In Possible Reunion": “Kiro, Dani's lover, had not died on Kinooine, although incredibly wounded, he was able to eventually escape and make his way back to his homeworld.” Split it into two sentences.
 * 19) **Done. Cull Tremayne 01:36, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:32, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) Toprawa:
 * 22) * Here, you say she was in the Alliance Military, and I've linked as such. But, if she was in a more specific unit, like the Alliance Army, as I'm assuming, please reword/link appropriately: "becoming a soldier in the Alliance Military"
 * 23) **It's not specified, but I don't remember her training in a starfighter or with the fleet, only on the ground. During Saijo, she was on the ground, so that might be evidence enough. Then again, two definite starfigher pilots were on the ground during that battle as well. Might as well just leave it with military. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * You say she was a well-known Zeltron in the New Republic, but she is only listed with a Reb era tag. Please add NR tag.
 * 25) **Good catch. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * I'm a bit confused as to the time period here. You say previously that Dani's interaction with the group happened shortly after Yavin, but here implies that this takes place during 3 ABY, after ESB, when Solo is in carbonite. Please clarify: "working with Boba Fett during Solo's capture, and the Rebels hoped to convince the hunter to tell them where Fett had taken Solo"
 * 27) **Well the OOU explanation is that the previous comic was a flashback tale, taking place before ESB. The next comic then reverts to "real time", several years later, and after ESB. I think I mentioned something about "years later", but if you think it needs more explanation, I can put something else in. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Yeah, addding something as simple as the year, 3 ABY, I'm guessing, would do a lot to clarify. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) ****Added. Cull Tremayne 06:00, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) * Avoid this speculative phrasing: "she apparently got sidetracked on the way"
 * 31) **Removed "apparently". The problem with this is that in that comic, Luke sees a Zeltron and thinks it's Dani. Leia corrects him and tells him it's a different Zeltron. Then, several comics later, Dani mentions that she was there, though how she missed Luke is a mystery. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * Consider removing or rewording this speculation: "Perhaps taking inspiration from the Zeltron and looking to minimize the risk of their operations"
 * 33) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) * Under the "Back with Rick Duel gang," Dani meets up with Skywalker, seemingly post-Endor. Give a time frame for this.
 * 35) **Added. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) * Please use a less POV-ish description than "beautiful": "came upon a beautiful tomb"
 * 37) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) * Elaborate on what this is: "signaling the activation of the Shawken Device"
 * 39) **Added. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) * Give a brief description of how this benefits him, being a water creature: "Placing Kiro in an enclosed water chamber..." Additionally, it will help to quantify this phrase later: "cutting open Kiro's rebreather suit"
 * 41) **Added. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) * This seems like it may have substance from the story, but if not, remove speculation: "Possibly because of the emphasis on meditation"
 * 43) **Removed possibly. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) * Please remove this uncertainty: "Although it's not certain how the Huhk was subdued"
 * 45) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * Please remove this speculation, unless clearly substantiated: "and perhaps as a side effect to their training together"
 * 47) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) * Radios: "radio contact"
 * 49) **Changed. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) * Please remove this unknown. If we don't know what she did, there's no reason to add this: "Although Dani was on Endor at the time, it's unknown if she was involved in the Battle of Endor"
 * 51) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) * Consider making this sentence the beginning of a new paragraph: "Although she had been fully unreachable"
 * 53) **Without the Endor sentence, won't the previous paragraph be two sentences long? Or is that the idea? Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) ***Sort of. As long as the paragraph isn't just one sentence, it's fine with me. The info there seems very disjointed from the beginning of the paragraph. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 55) ****Separated. Cull Tremayne 06:00, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 56) * Provide a brief description of who this guy is, since this is his first drop into the story: "Knife"
 * 57) **Done. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) * Please remove this unknown: "Whether the heroes eventually found Dani and if the two lovers were ever reunited is unknown"
 * 59) **This is one of those RPG elements. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) * Additionally, and per the Kiro article, please rename the section title. Maybe "Learning the truth" would be good?
 * 61) **You got it. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 62) *A well-written article, Cull. I enjoyed reading this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:02, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 63) **Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 18 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Marvel influx. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:18, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 01:28, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * POV: "Unfortunately, Kiro went missing"
 * 3) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Briefly elaborate on what The School is: "was a member of The School"
 * 5) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * In the first mention you capitalize "The." Pick one format and stick with it for consistency: "the School"
 * 7) **Gah, that was dumb. Not sure why I did that. Capitalization is gone. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * I've linked the following to "Star system." If the story names a specific system, however, please link accordingly: "within the system"
 * 9) **Added link to Iskalon system. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * POV: "Unfortunately, the Iskalonian representatives"
 * 11) **Gone. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * I'm going to refrain from making a funny comment here, but please rephrase: "Kiro was ready for some action"
 * 13) **I wrote that? :-P Reworded. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * POV: "Unfortunately, at the same time"
 * 15) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * POV: "arrived to save the day"
 * 17) **Rephrased. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * I don't think this is a word. Avoid slang: "Kiro's do-gooder attitude"
 * 19) **Heh. Dictionary.com is never wrong! Reworded. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Bah! Oh, well. :P Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:04, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * POV: "Luckily, Chihdo's blast was"
 * 22) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) ***This phrase wasn't changed. You could reword it to say "Luckily for Kiro," for ex. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:04, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) ****I could've sworn that I changed it to "However". Wasn't trying to pull the wool over your eyes. :P Changed now I hope. Cull Tremayne 06:10, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *****I trust ya. ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:18, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * This description of him as a Rodian is kind of sudden. Make sure you as a description of him as such in his initial mention in the article: "he slammed the Rodian"
 * 27) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * Elaborate on what this is: "activating the Shawken Device"
 * 29) **Added. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) * Avoid the rush: "The group rushed Kiro back to their ship and placed him in a water-filled capsule to rush"
 * 31) **Nice. Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * Unless the story specifically mentions a "radio," avoid this terminology: "their radio silence"
 * 33) **Changed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) * POV: "Unfortunately, Lumiya was able to defeat Skywalker"
 * 35) **Gone. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) * You link lightsaber to shoto here. Just confirming he did indeed fight with a shoto, and, if so, you should specify it was not a typical lightsaber: "Kiro helped Skywalker build another lightsaber"
 * 37) **I should probably place a ref to the JVS sourcebook here. Clarified. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) * This could be worded better: "Skywalker ran from the base and back to their ship, but halfway back to the ship"
 * 39) **Reworded. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) * Everyone? Probably an unnecessary generalization: "Everyone in the Alliance assumed that Kiro had died in the attack"
 * 41) **Yes everyone! Changed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) * POV: "Unfortunately, during the war"
 * 43) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) * Avoid this: "If the Rebels ever located Dani or if she ever reunited with her lost love is unknown."
 * 45) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * In accordance with the previous objection, please rephrase this section title: "Possible reunion"
 * 47) **Dangit, I liked that section header. :P Changed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) * After looking back over this quote, there seems to be some discrepancy whether it is "The School," or "the School." Make sure you find out which is the proper format and stick with it throughout: "We of the School"
 * 49) **Changed. Got confused with trying to link to the article, shouldn't be capitalized. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) * This sentence in the intro makes it seem as if he became disillusioned as a result of his going missing, but the article seems to suggest that it was because of his love for Dani and/or his responsibility to his people. Please clarify in the intro: "Kiro went missing in action during a conflict shortly thereafter and became disillusioned with the thought of becoming a Jedi."
 * 51) **Hmmm...good point. Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) * Unless I've missed it, you don't really set aside an explanation of how Kiro needed to wear a rebreather when not in the water, just that he is a water creature and he apparently was in trouble when his device was constantly being broken. Please elaborate early on in the article, as well as the P&T. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:05, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 53) **Good point. I really overlooked that. Added. Cull Tremayne 03:43, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * More Marvel. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

(0 Inq/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Yes. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:35, 16 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * If she met Anakin Skywalker during the Clone Wars, the article needs a Imp era tag, as does the infobox.
 * 3) **Done. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Link "Separatist" in the intro for me.
 * 5) **Linked. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * This suggests that the beings of Skye do not walk, as opposed to Humans. Please clarify what this means: "Although nearly all S'kytri were prejudiced against "walkers,""
 * 7) **Clarified that it's the derogatory term for those without wings. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Please confirm that Anakin was indeed a Knight at this point in the Clone Wars: "During an interaction with the Jedi Knight"
 * 9) **Good catch. Changed to Jedi Commander. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * Avoid finishing both clauses with the same word: "Although Skywalker tried to convince Kenobi to take Kharys for training, Kenobi and Ventor both agreed that 13 years old was much too old to take for training."
 * 11) **Changed. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Should specify that she was trained in the dark side of the Force: "Vader trained Kharys in the ways of the Force"
 * 13) **I'm not so sure that's warranted. I do mention that she succumbs to the dark side at the end of the paragraph, so it just seems a bit redundant to add it there as well. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ***Yeah, you're fine. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:30, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * I believe you're trying to say "aerial fortress" here, but just making sure it's not some kind of special IU word. If it is not, please remove the hyphen, unless the text specifically spells it as 'aerial-fortress'.: "aerie-fortress"
 * 16) **"Aliens in the Empire" specifically says "aerie-fortress". "ruling in the name of Vader and the Galactic Empire from her aerie-fortress perched high atop Canaitith Mountain." It's probably referring to this line from the comic, "One Boy?! My Aerie gutted and ruined by one--wingless--boy?!?" There's a couple other references in the comic that say "aerie", as well. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * Explain what the "windborn" is : "the windborn could do nothing to stop her."
 * 18) **Mmm...not so sure about this one. From the context it's showing that "windborn" is another name for S'kytri. Added an explanation, but I think it reads awkwardly. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***Agreed that it is now kind of awkward sounding. Not an objection, but consider just removing the Windborn descriptor in this case. And, if you do that, you'll probably need to either add a description somewhere earlier that her race was known as the Windborn, or remove the second use of the term further down in the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:30, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ****I went with explaining the term in the first section. Cull Tremayne 02:39, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * I'm clearly too lazy to do this research myself, but I'm certain the Millennium Falcon has more than one lifepod. If so, rephrase accordingly: "in the Falcon's lifepod."
 * 22) **Changed to "one of the Falcon's lifepods." Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Before this sentence, "Bringing Solo and Chewbacca back to her fortress keep," you never actually say that Solo, and Chewbacca for that matter, was captured, just that they were trapped and shot down, and that Skywalker and Organa escaped. Please clarify.
 * 24) **Clarified. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) ***Nice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:30, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * Seemingly Skywalker should not have this ability at such an early stage, but please clarify what's going on here: "and the two began to duel in midair."
 * 27) **Did I not mention the grav-belt thingy? He's not using the Force to fly. Clarified in an earlier sentence that he was flying over the stormtroopers. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Ah, I didn't take into account the anti-grav deal. The clarification helps. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:30, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * Along with that, this seems strange. If they're fighting in midair, he could only be frozen in midair, right? Maybe a rewording and/or elaboration somewhere along these two lines: "freezing him in midair"
 * 30) **Changed the second "midair" to "place". Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Now that you clarified for me what was going on, you can change it back to midair if you like that better. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:30, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * You capitalize Windborn here, but do not do so previously. Pick one, which the correct format is, and stick with it for consistency: "The Windborn" Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:16, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) **Typo. Changed to capitalization. Cull Tremayne 08:28, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Ditto. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

(1 Inq/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Marvel-ous. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:22, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:04, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Toprawa:
 * 1) * Give a time frame for when this occurred. 0 ABY, or whatever it is: "Based on the ice world of Akuria II"
 * 2) **Added. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * Destroy the intro red link so the front page looks pretty
 * 4) **Red link destroyed. Cull Tremayne 21:59, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * The intro could benefit from a brief elaboration of how an Imperial specifically impersonated Odan himself: "as the Imperials and their leader..."
 * 6) **What do you have in mind? He basically just said that he was Odan. Skywalker and Organa weren't familiar with the real guy, so they just took him at his word. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Ah, nevermind> I was under the impression that he altered his appearance to mirror the real Odan.
 * 8) * Something here could be reworded better: "to rescue the Rebel leaders from the Imperial leader"
 * 9) **Well done me. Changed. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ***I went in and took out "heroes," and just let it as "the Rebels." I feel "heroes" in this case is a bit over the top POV wise. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:03, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * POV: "Unfortunately, the leader of the rescue party"
 * 12) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * The way this sentence is structured makes it seem as though Skywalker and Organa cannot speak Basic: "Unable to speak Basic, Skywalker and Organa misinterpreted Fafnir"
 * 14) **Changed. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * Unfortunately is POV, and I might go so far to say miraculous is a bit POVish: "Unfortunately, after their miraculous escape"
 * 16) **Can I use thrilling? ;) Removed. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * POV: "Unfortunately, the Imperial leader"
 * 18) **Gone. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * I would recommend rewording this, since I'm guessing they weren't truly using radios. Are radios even canon, btw? "the Imperial leader had already radioed"
 * 20) **They aren't? Huh. Removed. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) ***I'm not sure if they are or not. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:03, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * Remove this speculation unless substantiated in the story: "...an injury probably sustained during a fight against the Empire."
 * 23) **Gone. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Same here. Very speculative: "The reason that Odan had not accepted a prosthetic replacement is uncertain, but the low rate of technology on Akuria II may have been a factor."
 * 25) **Ditto. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) *** Consider removing this part as well, unless we know for sure he truly had a bum eye. He may just be wearing the patch for weird dramatic effect, for all we know: "The reason that Odan had not accepted a prosthetic replacement is uncertain." Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:03, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) ****Done. Cull Tremayne 02:50, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * This clause seems unnecessary, since GG3 was published after and does take into account TESB: "even though the story was published before the release of Episode V: The Empire Strikes Back"
 * 29) **I'm not sure why the clause isn't necessary. Isn't it interesting to note that "The Kingdom of Ice" was published before the reveal of Hoth? Or am I just not clarifying correctly? I reworded it to specify that the comic, not the sourcebook, was the story published prior to the film. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) *** I know what you're saying, but the way it is worded seems to suggest that the story was specially retconned following the ESB, as if its some unique case. The real problem I have is the "even though" phrase. I would recommend replacing that with just "following the release of ESB" or whatever.
 * 31) ****I see what you're saying. Moved the mention of the publishing date so it's less confusing. Cull Tremayne 02:50, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * In GG3's Maren Kelsome entry, it describes Kelsome as experiencing a strong difference between the tightly-run service of Echo Base and the more laid back, rag-tag way Odan ran his troops. I would like to see a mention of this in P&T. If you need anything from GG3, let me know. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:58, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) **Added. Cull Tremayne 07:42, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) ***Very nice addition. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:03, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) Was his group separate from the Alliance before this? Could do with clarifying a little and, if so, he should probably be in Category:Resistance fighters. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:50, 19 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) *Added. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Marvel again. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * You may want to add something about Odin and Fafnir in the BTS. However, it could be too much speculation, and irrelevance, so feel free not to use it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:14, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Warrants a mention I would say. Cull Tremayne 02:58, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

(2 Inq/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Funny enough, I read this just a few days ago on your subpage, Cull. Nice job :)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:35, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Ditto --Eyrezer 01:54, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Lord Hydronium 09:57, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:23, 19 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 02:50, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Source the succession box. --Imperialles 19:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 3) * “Following their new Mandalore, Shysa and his friends joined 198 other local police and a dozen former Death Watch to form the Mandalorian Protectors, one of the most formidable forces to fight in the Clone Wars.” Death Watch what?
 * 4) **Added "commandos" after Death Watch. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * Also, later in that sentence, add something like “to fight for the CIS in the Clone Wars.”
 * 6) **Added. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * "Around this time, and perhaps during one of these covert missions, officer Shysa had a run in with C-3PX. Although the nature of their meeting was undocumented, the formidable droid gave Shysa and the Mandalorians the inspiration to acquisition a droid army for themselves, making them a fighting force to be reckoned with." Clarify what’s so special about 3PX. Then, remove “formidable” from the next sentence.
 * 8) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * "...after the emergence of Jango Fett's real son, Boba, as an accomplished Bounty Hunter..." Bounty hunter doesn’t need to be capitalized.
 * 10) **Right you are. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * "After awaking from unconsciousness, Shysa led his men in an attempt to stop Organa from freeing their prisoner, but only arrived in time to see her become the victim of the double-cross." This reads awkwardly.
 * 12) **Rephrased. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Believing this to be a perfect time to mount an attack against the slavers, Shysa fired a flare out of one of the city's windows, triggering an assault by Shysa's forces." You use "Shysa" too many times here.
 * 14) **Yes I do. Changed. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * Little later: "He began beating the Suprema with the butt of his blaster and showing no mercy." Again, please rephrase this.
 * 16) **Reworded. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * Later in the paragraph you start two sentences with “however”. Please change one of those.
 * 18) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * "...unexpectedly saving Boba Fett from death.” I suggest removing “unexpectedly".
 * 20) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *Nothing wrong with this sentence, but it made me crack up. "Shysa passed the test, but both Solo and Luke Skywalker did not, as the computer decreed that both pilots flew in ways that no sane pilot would ever attempt."  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:56, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Toprawa:
 * 1) *Please reword the first 'alliance': "Following the end of the conflict and the alliance of the Nagai with the Alliance of Free Planets"
 * 2) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *Give a description of what C-3PX was at this point. Bounty hunter, assassin droid, whatever: "Shysa had a run in with C-3PX"
 * 4) **Added. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *Please remove the unknown: "Although the nature of their meeting was undocumented"
 * 6) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) *The way you enumerate his battles during the Clone Wars becomes awkward to read, constantly saying "on this planet, on this planet, on this planet." Don't be so concerned with linking the planet as opposed to linking the battle itself. I would recommend removing the "on's" and just pipelinking the battle into the name of the planet.
 * 8) **Thank you. I wasn't sure what to do with that. :-P Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) *Consider rewording this, since I don't think Shysa was truly a Rebel at this point: "Unfortunately for the Rebels"
 * 10) **Rephrased. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) *Elaborate on what kind of craft comprise Shrike Squadron: "Shrike Squadron"
 * 12) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *POV: "Unfortunately, just as this news was becoming known"
 * 14) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) *Please reword or consider removing the last part entirely. Don't assume anything: "The outcome of the conflict was undocumented, but due to Shysa's continued survival, it can be assumed that the Nagai were victorious over their Tof oppressors."
 * 16) **Rephrased. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *Remove speculation: "perhaps due to Shysa's travels away from his homeworld"
 * 18) **Done. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) *Nice job on the BTS both here and for Dani. That's the way I like to see it done. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:06, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Should "Mandalorian Government" be capitalized in the first sentence of the Clone Wars section? Havac 02:59, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "an archaeologist with no morals"? I'm sure you can get your point across in a more NPOV way. "snobby scholars" too. Havac 02:59, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * And again. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Hah, what's with Leia's sudden inarticulate speech in the "Encounter with the Rebels" section? Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:06, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * She's actually making fun of his accent when she says "agin' what's wrong". So she's not being inarticulate, just a condescending...well you know. :-P Cull Tremayne 03:33, 18 February 2008 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Wheee, Marvel! Nice read, Cull.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) He's Greyman, and we approve this article.  Graestan ( Talk ) 06:41, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Han Solo is a wife beater...huh... Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:19, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * The intro becomes somewhat difficult to read with all of the "Alliance's." Reword some.
 * 3) **Not that I disagree with you, but this is gonna be difficult. I can't use "Rebels", since they specifically don't call each other that anymore. If I remove it entirely, the pronouns make it somewhat vague. Mind giving me a kick in the right direction? Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I'm not so sure that you should not use Rebels still. As far as I can tell, during the time frame the intro covers, the Rebel Alliance had not yet reformed into the Alliance of Free Planets. Additionally, regardless of what they want to call themselves, they're still not really the true galactic government until they throw the Empire out of Coruscant. So by my account, they're still "rebelling." Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:07, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Rebels it is. Varied up some. Cull Tremayne 02:56, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * This picture caption. Is this bloodstripe the Corellian bloodstripe? If so, link this: "Bey talks with Han Solo after winning the bloodstripe."
 * 7) **Hmmm, I was under the impression that we don't link in picture captions anymore. Correct me if I'm wrong. It is the Corellian bloodstripe though. Apparently I'm linking to the ship. Good catch. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***I've not heard anything to the effect of no linking in picture captions. I do so regularly in cases just as this. But, I believe it's more of a preference thing, so the linking is up to you. At any rate, I went in and specified in the caption and the article that it is the Corellian Bloodstripe. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:07, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Not true: "Since the Galactic Civil War had just ended,"
 * 10) **Reworded. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * You end two consecutive sentences with identical phrasing. Reword one of them: "before arriving on the planet."
 * 12) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Building" becomes obtrusive here. Please reword: "As Bey and the rest of the travelers explored the building, Solo realized that the building"
 * 14) **Wow, that is sad on my part. Replaced. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * For the sake of casual readers, give a brief description of who these people are: "Lemo and Sanda"
 * 16) **Done. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * As well as this guy: "Barpotomous Drebble"
 * 18) **Ditto. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * The Alliance Fleet? If so, specify: "Bey stayed with the fleet"
 * 20) **Added. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Reword one of these hopes: "Calrissian's only hope was being brought inside the House of the Goddess in hopes"
 * 22) **Heh. Reworded. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Unless this is some special IU axiom that I am unfamiliar with, if you're referring to the group as a whole, the apostrophe here is incorrectly placed. It should be "Godoans." Please fix this throughout the article: "the Godoan's"
 * 24) **Yes, yes. Temporary brain flatulence. Was there somewhere else that I made that mistake? Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *** This should be Godoans': "he would open fire on the Godoan's capital city"
 * 26) * Same thing with the intro. It becomes uncomfortable reading so many "Alliance's" in such a short span: "and the Alliance prepared to evacuate. The Alliance Fleet readied itself to cover the evacuating Alliance personnel"
 * 27) **Is this the same objection as the first one? Or did you mean the "Nagai-Tof War" instead of "intro"? I reworded that sentence...still thinking of ways to cut down on its usage. Any help? Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ***You got it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:07, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * Please reword "a lot." That's just lazy phrasing: "Bey remarked that he could forgive his brother a lot"
 * 30) **Heh. That's what I get for quoting the character. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * Specify what these other things are, or remove this phrasing: "Among other things"
 * 32) **Was referring to how the article is actually about Alien species, not Bey. In any case, it's removed. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * Reword one of these mentions: "Bey had another mention in Abel G. Peña's online article, The Dark Forces Saga, which mentioned that..." Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:06, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **Gah, I am doing that way too much. :-P Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Guess. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/4 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) And here I thought I was done reading these. Hobbes ( Tiger's Lair ) 03:36, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) She's an interesting character. And I removed the image with DivX watermark and uploaded a new version of the frame. -- Delmar Nori 17:04, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:50, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Adamwankenobi 02:14, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 16:18, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:09, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) Though the single redlink in the intro should be fixed. --Imperialles 19:34, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Image:LeafQueen3.JPG: DivX watermark? Come on. --Imperialles 19:28, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Watermark removed. Cull Tremayne 05:59, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa:
 * 3) * Remove the periods from the quote attribution lines.
 * 4) **Done. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *Destroy that red link in the intro so it doesn't muck up the Main Page later
 * 6) * I'm confused by what you're saying here. Should it not be her advice?: "and they took his advice on occasion."
 * 7) **No, Logray is a male. I think the sentence reads fine, but if you think it needs rewording, just tell me. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Ok, I understand now. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Hmm, how unfortunate... 9.9 POV: "Unfortunately, the young Princess was a poor gardener"
 * 10) ** This is POV? Her plants consistently died, she was unable to prevent them from doing so. Is a change to "was not the best gardener satisfactory? D'oh! Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ***"Unfortunately" implies pity. I think you see that, though. ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Lots of telling going on. Rephrase something here: "Telling Kneesaa that she would return in three days, the Leaf Queen told her"
 * 13) **Slightly rephrased. Tell me if it still reads awkwardly. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ***I made a slight change to the last clause. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * Please come up with a better verb here: "The plant responded by blossoming a beautiful brush from one of its blossoms"
 * 16) **Heh. Can't believe I didn't catch that. Fixed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *** Original objection fixed, but after reading this again, "beautiful" is rather POVish. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ****Changed to colorful. Cull Tremayne 05:59, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * Remove the unfortunate POV: "Unfortunately, Kneesaa's friends"
 * 20) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * This gives the bag an element of unnecessary personification. Please rephrase: "she destroyed a bag of leaves that had been standing close by"
 * 22) **Rephrased. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Unfortunately, this is POV: "Unfortunately, by the time the Leaf Queen had returned"
 * 24) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) * Please rephrase so both clauses don't end in "one day": "the Leaf Queen told the princess that she would make a fine protector of the Soul Trees one day, confirming that the whole ordeal had likely been a test to see whether Kneesaa was fit to rule one day"
 * 26) **Good catch. Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Were they dating? Please rephrase: "entered into a relationship with a Frost Sprite known as Odra."
 * 28) **Clarified. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Hah, they /were/ dating? I meant that teasingly. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) * Elaborate on what these "personal abilities" are: "personal abilities"
 * 31) **Elaborated. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * Unless this is a clearly substantiated possibility presented in the show, remove this speculation: "Using unknown methods but perhaps through the Force"
 * 33) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) * POV: "Unfortunately, the message"
 * 35) **Gone. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) * "Boarding" the leaf seems inappropriate, since it's not really a vehicle: "The four Ewoks boarded the flying leaf"
 * 37) **Don't you board a sled? That's basically what this thing is. I'll change it to "jumped onto". Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) ***Do you? I dunno. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) * Unless there is something explicit in the show that suggests this was the ultimate fate of these...creatures...avoid speculation: "After thanking the Ewok children, the Leaf Queen and her siblings likely returned to their normal routine of passing the Season Scepter among each other as the seasons changed."
 * 40) **Well, the seasons kept changing? There wasn't anymore perpetual winter? I guess I see what you're saying, but this isn't an extrapolation beyond what's obvious IMO. I'd even go so far as to say it's heavily implied that "things went back to normal" ie, the passing of the scepter. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) *** Safe enough to assume this, but reword it so there is no speculation. Ex: The Leaf Queen and her siblings returned to the continuation of their duties, etc. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) ****Changed. Cull Tremayne 05:59, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) * Same speculation deal: "It is unknown how integral this device was to performing these magical acts, but it is apparent that the Leaf Queen had an inherent ability most likely related to Force-sensitivity."
 * 44) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) * There are? Whose arguments? Smells like pure speculation: "There are a number of ways in which a being like the Leaf Queen could have come into existence. It is not known if the Leaf Queen was a manifestation of the Force, a being deformed by the Force, or a fraud, but there are a number of arguments for each possibility."
 * 46) **Take it up with the Sun King and the Snow King. :-P Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 47) * Along with this Force speculation. If it is indeed speculation unsubstantiated by the show, you'll need to remove the entire "Force manifestation" section.
 * 48) **Twas just copied verbatim from two previously mentioned articles. Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) * As well as the "Deformed sentient" section. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:03, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) **Ditto. Removed. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 51) * I'm willing to bet that with some digging around, you can find out who voiced the Leaf Queen and add this info to the BTS. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:42, 15 February 2008 (EST)
 * 52) **Fo-sheezy. Cull Tremayne 08:34, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 53) ***After some hunting, other sites give the same information as in the episode. There were people who did additional voices. One of them could've done the Leaf Queen. Unfortunately, the people who did the additional voices are the same for every episode. Heck, it could've been one of the main voice cast people. There's just no way of knowing for sure without contacting the people, and this is such an old show that that will prove difficult if not impossible. Cull Tremayne 03:51, 15 February 2008 (EST)
 * 54) ****Phooey. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:10, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 55) From the Chron-o-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 56) * Era icons don't match the infobox. And shouldn't it just be the Rebellion era?
 * 57) **Gross oversight. Changed to Rebellion era, icons changed to match. Cull Tremayne 02:42, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) *Not an official objection since it's not a rule, but I'd like to see the redlink in the intro die. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:23, 19 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not Marvel, but just as silly. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * The article have five support votes. If there's no more objections, it can be featured. -- Delmar Nori 14:05, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Please read the requirements at the top of the page. Greyman ( Paratus ) 14:09, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Sure. We must wait at least a week without objections. Now there's objections about the voices of episodes The Wish Plant and The Season Scepter. Other Wookieepedians could changed the article, but I can't aver the informations about the voices. We must wait other Wookieepedians' help, too. -- Delmar Nori 14:46, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * No, the part that says "Also, if, at least a week after the article's nomination, that article has 5 Inquisitor supports and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), it will be added to the queue, and will be officially known as a "featured article." That means that it needs a) no objections left standing, and b) 5 or more votes from Inquisitors. Right now, the article only has 2 Inq votes (Hobbes and myself), and it's only been two days since it was nominated -- not a week or more. Once it meets the criteria (which I'm sure it will eventually), then it will be an FA. Not before, though. Greyman ( Paratus ) 16:18, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * That's right. The article needs more three Inquisitors nominations to gain the FA status. Thanks for your explanation. -- Delmar Nori 21:41, 16 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Interesting fellows. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:04, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Certainly.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 02:15, 18 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "Around the same time, a Bith trader named Maddie Macatten put great effort into tracking down the Aing-Tii and discovering their homeworld. The monks had previously freed her from slavers and she wished to find them and thank her rescuers face to face. Macatten actually unearthed a large amount of information on the monks, though most of it was lost amongst her senile rambling. The Aing-Tii made a enemy during this period, also." This is confusing. Why was she senile? Old age? Did they do anything to her, etc.?
 * 3) **Clarified. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:12, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Also, you say that they sent Car'das to Exocron twice in "History".  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:06, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **Whoops. Fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:12, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I've not done a non-character article in a while, so I may be a bit rusty. Additionally, I'm supposed to be on a WookieeVacation, so I might not be very quick in addressing any problems. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:04, 17 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Havac 00:05, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

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(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:16, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Imperialles 20:59, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 21:32, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Two things:
 * 2) *"After a successful career, Mordon rose to the rank of admiral" His career ended before he became an admiral?
 * 3) *"allowed him to enjoy the solitude too often missing aboard a starship." POV.
 * --Imperialles 19:48, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Havac 20:49, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan ( Talk ) 21:19, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:37, 20 February 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * My first non-character FA. Rejoice. Havac 20:49, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * If you're anything like me, you won't want to go back. Graestan ( Talk ) 21:19, 20 February 2008 (UTC)