Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations

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 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information from all sources and appearances, especially a biography for character articles.
 * 10) &hellip;not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
 * 11) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 12) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 13) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 14) &hellip;include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "powers and abilities" section on all relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of good quality if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
 * 18) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

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 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
 * 2) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 3) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
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 * 5) Also, if, at least a week after the article's nomination, that article has 5 Inquisitor supports and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), it will be added to the queue, and will be officially known as a "featured article".

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 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterwards, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under! Failure to do so will result in your objection being considered invalid.
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 * 5) Once all objectors' complaints have been solved (or the article has five supporting Inquisitor votes and no objections after at least a week), the article will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article".

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(5 Inqs/5 Users/10 total)
Support
 * I nominated this article because it seemed very good, and hope you like it!StarWarsDude 21:56, 20 October 2007 (UTC) (You didn't nominated the article. Also, single issue voter, struck per policy.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 04:31, 27 October 2007 (UTC))


 * 1) Sikon 17:24, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 11:56, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Sikon, this is bloody good. I demand more FAs out of you, sonny! Thefourdotelipsis 02:38, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Per 4dot. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 02:52, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Lord Hydronium 12:24, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:24, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Slash Z 19:29, 7 October 2007 (UTC) (single issue voter, struck per policy.  Greyman ( Paratus ))
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 01:39, 9 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) -- Dark Lord Xander  ( Embrace The Dark Side! )[[Image:MandalorianSymbol.jpg|20px]] 03:45, 14 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Very nice. -- Ozzel 16:50, 23 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) A few things:
 * 2) * The infobox image (Image:Kotor.jpg) has a Dark Horse watermark is generally low quality. Replace this.
 * 3) ** Replaced. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) * The introduction needs a good rewrite. Things such as Dark Horse's other current Star Wars comics and the chronology of the series are best discussed in other sections.
 * 5) ** Addressed the issues you mentioned - tell me if something is still wrong. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) * There's a few punctuation errors throughout the article: several instances of punctuation being placed outside quotation marks, and em dashes are erroneously surrounded by spaces.
 * 7) ** Corrected em dashes. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * The "2007: Days/Knights" subsection of "Production" has several two-sentence paragraphs. Rewrite if possible. Why is the section given the affix of "Days/Knights," when the 2006 section has no affix at all?
 * 9) ** Explained on IRC, also see below. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * The section "Core characters" should either cover only the core characters, or be renamed to "Major characters" or something similar.
 * 11) ** Renamed to just "Characters". - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) * The thin paragraph issue applies to most of the "Plot" section as well, particularly the subsections "Commencement" and "Days of Fear, Nights of Anger."
 * 13) ** Expanded small paragraphs. - Sikon 14:56, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) * There's no reception section, and no mention of sales figures.
 * --Imperialles 17:50, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) ** Added. - Sikon 14:56, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) The core characters section needs to be wookified. At the very least, it needs a grammar cleanup.  Chack Jadson  Talk  20:09, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Image:Kotorteam.jpg needs to be properly sourced with the Information template. --Eyrezer 23:07, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) * Done. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) From the Grey of Man:
 * 3) * Image:Kotor.jpg is currently tagged with . Please rectify if this is going to be used.
 * 4) ** Deleted. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) * The infobox picture isn't really the best one that is out there, though I can understand why it was chosen. Maybe the following one, which I've linked to, would be better enjoyed by the community? Especially since it has full color. Image:Kotorhandbookcoverandtitle.jpg, just a suggestion.
 * 6) ** Done. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) * None of the character information in the "Core character" section has any reference tags. Please source info from the necessary appearances/sources.
 * 8) * What's the source for "&hellip;abbreviated as KotOR&hellip;"? I know it is often referred to as that around here, but is there a source for it being used in the comics/interviews/media etc.?
 * 9) ** Sourced. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * The caption ("Dark Horse promotional image and preliminary issue 0 cover") is not needed below the picture in the infobox.
 * 11) ** Removed. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) * Each entry in the Core Characters section needs to be expanded, IMO; and as already pointed out, needs to be cleaned up.
 * 13) ** See below about expansion. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) * It may have been intentional, but Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic 0: Crossroads is not listed, along with the other comics, in the "Media" section. All of the other comics which were collected into the TPB Commencement are listed, and Crossroads was collected in it as well&mdash;please include.
 * 15) ** It's there, see below. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) * Please completely source the "Continuity" section&mdash;only a few paragraphs and/or pieces of information are currently sourced. Even though some of the information may be obvious, it should still be sourced to comply with FAN standards.
 * 17) ** Sourced. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) *** Better, but the first two paragraphs still need ref tags. The first paragraph needs at least one, if not more, ref tags of where the KotOR comics reference the TOTJ comics and the KOTOR games. The second paragraph simply needs a ref tag from either the Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic video game or even the Strategy Guide since it details some of the information listed. Using both wouldn't be opposed to either. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 19) ****Reworded the first paragraph and restructured the section, so that the paragraph wouldn't require a reference (hopefully). As for the second, it openly says "in the game" and provides a link to said game, so I don't think it needs a reference - the game is established as the source for this information in the text itself, and I'm not a fan of having footnotes for the sake of them. - Sikon 12:20, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) *****Neither am I a fan of having footnotes for the sake of having them, if it can be avoided&mdash;and your re-wording of that specific part clears up my objection, thanks. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:24, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) * Formatting for the "Notes and references" section should be a scroll box at the very least.
 * 22) ** Done. - Sikon 08:51, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 23) * Once the writing objections listed by Imp, Chack, and myself have been looked after, I'll go through the actual writing of the article. I don't see any point in doing it before hand.
 * 24) * In the "Continuity" section, the first sentence says "Set in the years 3,964 BBY and 3,963 BBY, at a midpoint between Tales of the Jedi and the video games&hellip;". It needs to be made clear that that the video games are Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic and Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic II: The Sith Lords, as right now a wayward reader could mistake it for all the video games.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 25) ** Addressed. - Sikon 12:20, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 26) * I feel that introduction should make some mention about the fan reception of the series as well as any other relevant Real World impacts it has had&mdash;especially since it's an article about the overall series. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 27) ** There haven't been any significant real-world impacts, to my knowledge, besides Vector &mdash; which I have now mentioned in the intro. - Sikon 12:20, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 28) **An interesting FAN which I could see becoming the template for future projects like it. Greyman ( Paratus ) 00:57, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 29) From the beaker of Lord Hydronium:
 * 30) * Expand on a few things in "Plot Summary", particularly the second paragraph of "Commencement". First, some explanation of the knighting ceremony, and second, a few more details on the vision, like the figure you mention later.
 * 31) ** Expanded the Commencement section to clarify this. - Sikon 12:20, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 32) * Nothing about Vector.
 * 33) ** Added a section about Vector and mentioned it in the intro. - Sikon 12:20, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 34) *No other complaints here. - Lord Hydronium 09:16, 16 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 35) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 36) * Source handbook release.
 * 37) ** Done. - Sikon 12:32, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 38) *Copyedit plot summary
 * 39) *This is not the easiest of objections to resolve, but I'd like the prose in the plot summaries to be a little better. Some of the word choices don't seem to quite line up- I think a "misled" in there is kind of awkward. Another example is the way the last sentence of Flashpoint reads- it doesn't seem to flow. Also, a bit more detail in some parts, e.g. "After Zayne learned this." What did he learn- that the banker was his father? That the banker had been captured? Both?
 * 40) * Maybe it's because it has been freshly released/not fully released, but the Daze of Hate section is abominably small and hard to read/follow.
 * 41) ** Expanded with #20 events and restructured. - Sikon 12:32, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 42) *This is definitely not a hard and fast rule, but what about having an authors/pencillers/creators section on the page? Ozzel's SOTE soundtrack FA has a paragraph about McNeely and some of his background work, and I think that an entire series merits a section on the creators and their background, at least briefly.
 * 43) * Disambig link to other KotOR products needed.
 * 44) **Added. - Sikon 12:32, 30 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 45) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating Day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:24, 19 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 46) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 47) *"Vision on the rogue moon"? What is this (the Lucien Draay section) ? As it isn't mentioned before, some mention should go in Draay's bio.
 * 48) *Does Characters need to be referenced? At the very least, the final paragraph of each character should be referenced, if not the main information area, IMO.
 * 49) *Per Ataru on the Plot Summary prose. ..."standing right there with lightsabers drawn", "misled"... the prose could most definitely be improved.
 * 50) *"the operation that eventually results in Arven being freed"? What operation? Some detail about it should be added.
 * 51) * Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:17, 4 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 52) The infobox needs to be sourced. --Imperialles 15:59, 28 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Nominated on Sikon's behalf per request on IRC. -- [[Image:AckbarSig.jpg|40px]] dmirableAckbar  ( It's A Trap! ) 17:24, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Confirming the request on IRC. :) Plus some responses:
 * Sourced the "KotOR" abbreviation.
 * Replaced infobox picture per Greyman's suggestion, deleted Image:Kotor.jpg. Removed caption.
 * Removed references to other DH titles and specific years from the intro. Tell me if anything else needs to be done about it.
 * As I told Imp on IRC, 2007 has the "Days/Knights" subtitle because that's how Dark Horse refers to that meta-arc. There was no codename for 2006, hence no subtitle.
 * Renamed "Core characters" to just "Characters". But what is meant by "wookifying" this section? I'm not sure it needs to be expanded, either - it's an article about the overall series, so I tried to be as brief and concise as possible when describing the individual plot summaries and characters. Entries on individual arcs may have longer descriptions.
 * I still feel that the character entries should be longer, but I understand your reasoning and struck that particular objection. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Removed spaces around mdashes.
 * Reception section: I'll add it soon.
 * Thin paragraphs: I'll expand them.
 * Sourced the unsourced part of the "Continuity" section. Things without a reference footnote are sourced in-text - for example, "Alek references the Great Sith War in Star Wars Knights of the Old Republic 0: Crossroads."
 * Issue 0: Crossroads is already in the Media section, just out-of-order. Fourdot suggested listing everything by release date, and #0 was released after #1 and #2.
 * Put "Notes and references" in a scroll box, although I'm personally not a big fan of them.
 * Templatized the description for Image:Kotorteam.jpg.
 * - Sikon 07:48, 13 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Could someone strike Slash Z's vote, as he has no edits on the main namespace? Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 00:22, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Not a opposed vote here, but I tried previewing the article with all the character images on the right instead of on the left, and I think the article looks better that way. Anybody else want to take look at it that way and see if they agree? - JMAS 18:56, 16 October 2007 (UTC)

(1 Inq/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) I put a lot of work into this one; I think it's accurate, interesting, concise and complete. I would definitely welcome any criticisms or suggestions, but I definitely think it is worthy of being a featured article. &mdash; Colinmcev Talk 03:00, 1 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 04:27, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:08, 11 October 2007 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Just glanced at it, but the Personality and Traits should be at the end of the article, you know. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 04:11, 2 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed that.--Colinmcev 18:30, 2 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Would be nice to have a BTS (Behind the scenes) section, covering stuff like who created the character, where he first appeared, any continuity errors, etc. Also, this would be a good place to include one of those wacky Galaxies pics. -- Ozzel 02:39, 3 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *Added both. Thanks for the great suggestions!--Colinmcev 01:35, 3 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) From the Thoroughly Pounded Desk of Four Dot:
 * 6) * There's a little bit of POV in the intro, and "He betrayed Rogue Squadron during a covert mission and attempted to kill Corran Horn, but he was shot and killed by his lover, Inyri Forge." could probably be rephrased.
 * 7) **I reworked it a litlte bit and removed what I thought was the POV. If there is any left, or if you think it needs further rephrasing, please let me know or feel free to tweak it.--Colinmcev 01:27, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * "Zekka Thyne served on Black Sun" - Sounds dangerous. I think he just "served Black Sun", but I think "joined the Black Sun syndicate" would be better.
 * 9) **I agree! Fixed that.--Colinmcev 01:28, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * Just a general observation: There are a lot of unsightly "thin" paragraphs. Of course, you can "cheat" on this one and just merge a couple of the offending paragraphs together.
 * 11) **This is a bad habit of mine; in real life, I'm a reporter, and in newspaper articles small paragraphs are required. lol. I tightened them up a bit, but if you still think there are paragraphs that are too thin, please point out which ones and I'll make further fixes.--Colinmcev 01:38, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) * Another observation: The end of every paragraph containing In-universe information should have a relevant citation.
 * 13) **Fixed that.--Colinmcev 01:41, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) * "eliminate single targets and slaughtering informers and even their families." - This could be worded better.
 * 15) **Tightened the sentence altogether, I think it's better now.--Colinmcev 01:42, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) * "In 7 BBY, Fliry Vorru, then a Moff in charge of the Corellian Sector, was sent to Kessel after being framed by Prince Xizor. This allowed Xizor to establish Zekka Thyne as his chief associate in Corellia." - How so? This might need more clarification.
 * 17) **Done.--Colinmcev 01:43, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) * "However, he was well protected by his heavily protected fortress" - One of the "protected"'s needs to be replaced, methinks.
 * 19) **Yeesh, what a lame mistake. Fixed that.--Colinmcev 01:43, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) * Even though you link to cutter, you might want to briefly explain what it is.
 * 21) **Done.--Colinmcev 01:44, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) * Take the image of the Bothan Thyne out of the bio and put it in the BtS. Also, assume that they're separate characters. I cite Chertyl Ruluwoor as a precedent.
 * 23) **I don't necessarily agree that the SWG Thyne should be a seperate character since both are affiliated with Black Sun and are clearly meant to be one and the same; maybe it's just me, but I think just noting the Bothan discrepency is enough. But I did move the pic.--Colinmcev 01:49, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 24) * "Although Loor attended the meeting during which the plan was formed, he started a confrontation with Corran Horn that resulted in Fliry Vorru punching him in his abdomen injury and smashing his head against the table." - Eh? You might have gotten you characters a bit mixed up there.
 * 25) **Yeah, that "Loor" should be a "Thyne." Fixed it.--Colinmcev 01:50, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 26) * The preceding sentence also starts with "Although", which doesn't flow well.
 * 27) **Fixed that and redid much of the sentence altogether.--Colinmcev 01:52, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 28) * "With this, Zekka Thyne died." - Too short a sentence, but I could be wrong. You'll want to integrate it into the preceding paragraph, though.
 * 29) **I think the short sentence works for effect, but I agree that it is WAY too short as an individual paragraph. Merged it with the previous one.--Colinmcev 01:53, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 30) * Mention who the other spy was in the Post-death section.
 * 31) **Done.--Colinmcev 01:55, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 32) *Best of luck with all that. It might take a bit of work, but I think there's some good foundation here. Thefourdotelipsis 09:36, 4 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 33) **If there's anything else, please don't hesitate to let me know. Thanks for the thorough look!--Colinmcev 01:56, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * OK, first things first: Don't strike other people's objections. It's frowned upon. However, you got most of them. I still have an issue with the paragraph spacing. Basically, in the first half of the article, merge every pair of paragraphs. It just looks a lot neater and, well, meatier. Thefourdotelipsis 23:27, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) **I'm really sorry about that, I've never nominated an article before so I didn't really know the proper procedure. I tightened the paragraphs a bit, let me know if you think that looks better.--Colinmcev 23:21, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) ***That's OK, you know now. Good work with this though. It looks fine to me now. Thefourdotelipsis 04:27, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Got some things here:
 * 4) * In the Appointment to Corellia section, it first says the Moff was framed by Xizor. Then it later syas it is widely believed he was framed. That sounds reptitive and contradicts the above info somewhat.
 * 5) **Actually, Moff Fliry Vorru was definitely framed, and accordingly that is definitively stated. But the person who is noted as "widely believed" to have been framed is the previous owner of the fortress. That isn't Vorru, it's someone else who is never identified in any of the source material. So the two references are not related, and I don't think there's an error there.--Colinmcev 01:58, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) * Also, the protected fortress thing that Fourdot mentioned earlier needs fixing.
 * 7) **Right you are. Fixed that.--Colinmcev 01:58, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * In the Spy for Lorr section, the last paragraph needs to be ref'ed.
 * 9) **Done.--Colinmcev 01:58, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * In the Imperial scheme section, the second-to-last paragraph needs to be rephrased. It's too repetitive.
 * 11) **Good call. I think I fixed it, but if you still think it needs work, let me know or go ahead and rephrase it.--Colinmcev 02:00, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) * The last paragraph int hat section needs to be sourced.
 * 13) **Done.--Colinmcev 02:00, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 14) * In the Imprisonment paragraph, the "Maw" needs to be unlinked.
 * 15) **OK..--Colinmcev 02:02, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) * The first paragraph needs to be sourced too.
 * 17) **Fixed it.--Colinmcev 02:02, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) * In Presence on Coruscant, the first paragraph needs to be rephraes as it sounds repetitive.
 * 19) **I agree, big time. Fixed it.--Colinmcev 02:04, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) * Also, change execute to shoot.
 * 21) **To be honest, I don't think this change is entirely necessary, but I made it anyway.--Colinmcev 02:05, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) * In the Death section, "this new" should be "this news".
 * 23) **Another dumb mistake. Fixed.--Colinmcev 02:05, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 24) * In P&T, the word "Wookiee" needs to be unlinked. Also, rearrange it so it flows, going from his perosnality to his appearance than his tastes, not jumping around.
 * 25) **I think it already is that way; the first paragraph is personality, then we have three paragraphs of appearance, and the last one about his art taste. If this isn't acceptable, can you give me some further clarification on how it could be rearranged?--Colinmcev 02:08, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 26) * And everything from Release from Kessel to Post-death needs sourcing.
 * 27) **Done.--Colinmcev 02:08, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 28) *Good luck.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:24, 5 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 29) **Thanks again, I really appreciate the thoroughness!--Colinmcev 02:09, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 30) And now for something completely similar:
 * 31) *Source the rest of the infobox.
 * 32) **Is it OK the way it is now?--Colinmcev 00:35, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 33) *There's a few instances of redundant ref tags. If the whole paragraph is from the same source it only needs one ref at the end.
 * 34) **Removed those. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 01:34, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 35) *Include information about his quest in Galaxies.
 * 36) **This is the only one I really can't fix myself. I don't have Galaxies, and I've scoured the Net for info on his quests, but I can't find any. Maybe someone else can help me out here? I'd hate to see the whole article snagged just because of this...--Colinmcev 00:36, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 37) *Intro: "Although rumored to be the heir-apparent to Xizor's criminal organization..." Rumoured by who? This needs to be mentioned later in the article and sourced.
 * 38) **Done--Colinmcev 00:36, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 39) *Imperial scheme and capture: Source the first paragraph.
 * 40) **Done--Colinmcev 00:37, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 41) *Imprisonment on Kessel: "a spicer term used to describe close enough to a person that they could be trusted with cutting their spice" Can this be reworded?
 * 42) **Done--Colinmcev 00:37, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 43) *Presence on Coruscant: Needs something to lead into second paragraph, even if it's just "Some time later..." As it is, it feels disjointed.
 * 44) **Done--Colinmcev 00:38, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 45) *Presence on Coruscant: Second paragraph has a sentence starting with "but". Kill it if possible.
 * 46) **Would changing it to However be cheating? If so, I'll reword.--Colinmcev 00:36, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 47) *Presence on Coruscant: A brief mention of how the Rogues got involved in the Imperial raid would not go amiss.
 * 48) **Done--Colinmcev 00:36, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 49) *Personality and traits: "one massive black eye that was slowly fading" is a quote from the narrative, not something in-universe. Lose the quotes and make it something like "Corran Horn thought that it gave the impression..." Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:58, 11 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 50) **Done--Colinmcev 00:38, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 51) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 52) *Per GT on the infobox.
 * 53) **Is it good the way it is now?--Colinmcev 00:38, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 54) *Mention somewhere in the bio that he was born on Corellia, if this can be referenced.
 * 55) **It never says in either source material whether he was born there or not, so I can't really put it in.--Colinmcev 00:39, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 56) *Needs a mention of how Black Sun met its downfall.
 * 57) **Did that, and cited Shadow of the Empire for it.--Colinmcev 00:44, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 58) *The last sentence of Spy for Kirtan Loor seems a little out of place. Perhaps place it after the segment about the destruction (sort of) of Black Sun.
 * 59) **I just dropped it altogether; I guess it wasn't really necessary.--Colinmcev 00:44, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 60) *Ref the end of the first paragraph of 1.4.
 * 61) **Done--Colinmcev 00:44, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 62) *The last bit of 1.4 that says Thrawn captured Thyne is a bit unclear. I thought it said the Horns captured him earlier; in addition, a little mention on what happened after Hal shot him would be nice.
 * 63) **Done--Colinmcev 00:44, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 64) *"to describe close enough to a person that they could be trusted with cutting their spice"? This is unclear.
 * 65) **Reworded it.--Colinmcev 00:45, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 66) *"Myda wanted to take the offer, Kassar insisted that Inyri must make her own decision, and even expressed hope that Inyri might be able to change Thyne for the better." Who the heck are are Myda and Kassar?
 * 67) **I double checked, but there was already a first reference to them in there.--Colinmcev 00:45, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 68) *The first sentence of Presence on Coruscant makes no sense. When is Thyne talking to Horn? It is unclear what's happening there. All it says is that Thyne was about to be released, then next thing you know, he's psychologically attacking Horn.
 * 69) **Fixed this up.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 70) *"to look back and check on Inyri"? This could be reworded and made much clearer and more interesting than it is at the moment.
 * 71) **Reworded.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 72) *Mention why Loor feared Horn would try to kill him in 1.8.
 * 73) **Done.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 74) *Rogue Squadron Betrayal and Death is an unclear headline. Who's doing the betraying&mdash; Thyne or the Rogues?
 * 75) **Just changed it to Death. Seems easier and it still works.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 76) *First paragraph of this section is unclear and should be slightly reworded.
 * 77) **Done.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 78) *"Thyne instead told him there was at least one other spy in Rogue Squadron, although Thyne did not know that Rogue Squadron pilot Erisi Dlarit was the spy." This doesn't make sense, and Rogue Squadron is over-used in the sentence.
 * 79) **Clarified a bit.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 80) *In Post-death, the article makes it seem like Horn died in his confrontation with Celchu, not in the battle following it.
 * 81) **Fixed.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 82) *In the P&T, could the three paragraphs regarding his appearance be merged into one?
 * 83) **Done.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 84) *Is it specifically said in Side Trip that Thyne's taste in art was considered questionable by most? If not, it needs a seperate reference.
 * 85) **Clarified this.--Colinmcev 00:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 86) *Do you have a reference for the fact that Thyne was only referenced in the parts of the story written by Stackpole (BTS)?
 * 87) **No, it's a fact but I don't have a source, he's just the only author to have written him. How should I handle this? Drop the fact altogether? I think it's an interesting note so it would be a shame, but if that's how it would have to go I'd be fine with it.--Colinmcev 00:47, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * If, as GT says, he has a specific role in Galaxies beyond a mere appearance, it does need to be mentioned.
 * 1) **See above. I need help with this one because I don't have SWG.--Colinmcev 00:47, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *And that's all. Good luck with those. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 01:34, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I finally got to read Side Trip and I expanded the section with a whole lot of info from that. As that was the final major source for Zekka, I think this article is pretty much as complete as possible.--Colinmcev 01:35, 3 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Colinmcev, I uncrossed Chack's objections, because, after checking the history, I realized that he didn't cross them out, you did. For future reference, the way these things work is that you make a comment when you've addressed an objection, the objecting user looks at the article, checks to see if the objection is fixed to his/her satisfaction, and then crosses it off. If they still see a problem, they'll point it out. Thank you, and good work with the objections ;). Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 02:24, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Yeah, I'm sorry about that; as I said about, I've never nominated an article before so I didn't really know the proper procedure. I was basically crossing them off as I fixed them, but I'll make sure that doesn't happen again.--Colinmcev 23:21, 6 October 2007 (UTC)
 * It's fine. I'll try to look at the article later today.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 10:30, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
 * As I noted about, I need some help with Thyne's SWG quest. I don't have Galaxies and I can't find it anywhere online. Can someone else add this info for me? I think it would be a true shame if this couldn't become featured just because this is missing.--Colinmcev 00:47, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/4 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) Havac 02:24, 19 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 17:25, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 02:52, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Ozzel 05:44, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Janeway 13:49, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Sienarific. - Lord Hydronium 04:52, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) Cull Tremayne 05:28, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 8)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:45, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the unknown location of Jorrel Fraajic,
 * 2) * No mention of C-3PX?
 * 3) **Wasn't in any of his listed sources. Source me. Havac 22:07, 19 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) ***NEGtD. Not sure where it gets its information from, though.
 * 5) * "To that end, Sienar assumed a series of false identities and took work with competing firms, moving through the management of the Corellian Engineering Corporation, Baktoid Armor Workshop, Incom Corporation, and even the Trade Federation, where he gained firsthand experience undercover, without the distraction of his family name, and picked up various techniques from his competitors." - Seems long and unwieldy. I do know what you're saying, but others may not.
 * 6) **Do not question the long sentences! I'll split it. Havac 22:07, 19 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) * "Sienar was highly successful, however, paying minute attention to the market, closely and effectively managing his employees, and keeping his facilities small and centralized on Coruscant, where Sienar maintained an apartment in the elite 500 Republica building." - Same as the objection above.
 * 8) **Hmmm. Maybe just because I'm the crazy bastard who wrote it, but I'm not seeing too much of a problem there. I did have to stick the 500 Republica thing on there just to keep it from being a dangling fact, but I don't think the sentence suffers too much from it. Havac 22:07, 19 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Like I said, I do know what you're saying, I'm just not sure others will. But, I am appeased. Struck.
 * That looks like it to me. Good work, and a very interesting read. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 15:26, 19 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) That younger Tarkin image has some awful scanner artifact action going on. -- Ozzel 05:02, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed. -- Ozzel 05:44, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Image:Raith Sienar NEGTC.jpg is placed in the BTS, but has already been used for the infobox. Remove the duplicate. --Imperialles 22:36, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) *One's the full image, one's been cropped to be infobox-appropriate, and there's a lack of full Sienar images. I don't see the problem. - Lord Hydronium 23:00, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) **The problem is that the same picture appears in the same article twice. It's pointless repetition. --Imperialles 23:02, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) ***It's not pointless, though. The full picture shows unique information that the others don't. - Lord Hydronium 23:11, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) ****His &hellip;robe and shoes? --Imperialles 23:14, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) *****Yep. Doesn't matter if you don't think it's not important, but it's visual information found in none of the other pictures. - Lord Hydronium 23:21, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) The above was resolved per IRC. Now, I'd like to see Image:Raith Sienar NEGTC.jpg made relevant to the section. How about a short paragraph on his wardrobe? --Imperialles 23:26, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) *Umm, why? "Raith Sienar wore these clothes." There are two extant images of Sienar, and this is one. So it's in the article. It's relevant to the section because the section is about Sienar as a person, and hey, here he is. It's a NEGTC image; it is, by definition, without context. It shows him and it's put where it fits. This is just about the silliest objection I've seen. Havac 04:32, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments

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Support
 * 1) Ugh... Thefourdotelipsis 06:17, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) What an interesting little droid. Knock-off of Artoo.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:51, 20 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  &mdash;Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 03:36, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Imperialles 22:45, 3 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * It currently has two first appearances? Did they come out at the same time or what? --Eyrezer 02:01, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
 * They came in the same bundle, yes. Thefourdotelipsis 04:39, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Ok, sweet. --Eyrezer 08:22, 21 October 2007 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) --Harrar 18:04, 20 October 2007 (GMT)
 * 2) The All-knowing Sith&#39;ari 14:33, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 10:04, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) --I agree --Manuelin 14:15, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 5)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:13, 30 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The word "murdered" is POV. I don't think Alema Rar should be listed as a commander. And finally, I think the last sentence runs on. -LtNOWIS 02:18, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Murdered to eliminated, Alema Rar removed as commander, last sentence reshuffled. Thanks for t'input--Harrar 12:11, 21 October 2007 (GMT)
 * 3) Not to be picky, but... I'm not so sure we can say they "eliminated Jedi Masters [plural] at Ossus" if only Kam Solusar died. -LtNOWIS 21:14, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *Hah, you speak the truth...corrected--Harrar 00:16, 22 October 2007 (GMT)
 * 5) There is a broken reference (see the article's notes and references), and the infobox information needs to be sourced as well.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 23:25, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) *I can't spot the broken ref, sorry. I mean I know it's there but I can't find it. Also, since every single piece of info in the infobox is from inferno, can I group it in one big reference or do I have to put one after every point? thanks --Harrar 00:04, 24 October 2007 (GMT)
 * 7) **Fixed the broken ref. Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 02:52, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) From the Severely Pounded Desk of Four Dot
 * 9) * "The Battle of Kashyyyk took place in 40 ABY during the Confederation-Galactic Alliance War and, on the orders of Chief of State Jacen Solo, saw the attempted subjugation and punishment of a member-world by the Galactic Alliance. " - member-world of what?
 * 10) * We need a bit more extrapolation of the duel. Actually, I'd kinda like to see it merged, but that's just personal preference. As it is, explain it in more detail, and elaborate on the fact that Luke and Ben escape, that Jacen was at his mercy, blah, blah, blah.
 * 11) * A behind the scenes section would be great, stating that Troy Denning created the battle, and it is used as the climax of Inferno.
 * 12) *All in all, good work. Thefourdotelipsis 10:48, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) **Ok opening point addressed but I'm not sure how well...added a Main article link into the text's body for the anakin solo duel and did a bit of info...but I feel with the encyclopedaic attitude it's dwelling too much on the actions of the characters rather than the battle itslef. The duel article is such a joke anyway it's basically been written by someone with the book in one hand and a keyboard at the other, so I hope that doesn't impact on the article's FA journey. Finally, I added a little in the Bts section. Thanks Four Dot. Keep the FAs coming yourself btw, great job! --Harrar 00:38, 24 October 2007 (GMT)

Comments
 * Well it ain't a character! --Harrar 18:04, 20 October 2007 (GMT)

(1 Inqs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 07:39, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 22:42, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:40, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Maliciously Pounded Desk of Four Dot
 * 2) * Surely a better infobox image can be found. At the very least, a tighter crop and higher resolution scan of the current shot.
 * 3) **Greyman is going to get me a better scan, which I will crop. That's the best image for Stonebone as far as detail and size in concerned, at least IMHO.
 * 4) * "mosquito-like" - Eh, that's not how it's spelled IU. Msqito, my friend. Msqito.
 * 5) **It's spelled mosquito(es) in Tales of the Jedi, though I've changed it anyway.
 * 6) ***It is? Where's Mosquito then? :P
 * 7) * "mighty" is POV.
 * 8) **Reworded.
 * 9) * Enforcer One links to a disambig page.
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) * It's TOTJ. I've had enough of it!
 * 12) **Just for you, I'm doing Ood Bnar next. :) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 12:06, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) ***OK. But I see Thon down below...
 * 14) ****I finished my work on Thon a good while ago. Though I did do another article...(not a TOTJ one though so it doesn't count) :P --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 15:27, 23 October 2007 (UTC)
 * OK, that's enough. Thefourdotelipsis 11:14, 22 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

(2 Inq/4 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 23:06, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 12:08, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Ozzel 04:45, 31 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:41, 31 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 23:27, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 6)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:45, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) I'm not an expert, but I'd say bloodthirsty is POV. There's also a bit of repetition in the intro/main body: "carving out a slice" and "carve out a piece," one of which could be rephrased. "...actually a cell that allowed powered ships" -- I might be reading this wrong, but could that be clarified a little. Also, perhaps a minor explanation of who Teek is? (I know I'm rather biased). Other than those few minor things, I enjoyed reading it. :) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 15:55, 23 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixerised. Thefourdotelipsis 23:52, 23 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Seems like there are a few repetitions of specific words and phrases between the intro and bio (and, specifically with "short in stature," the P&T as well). Might want to reword a little to keep each section fresh. -- Ozzel 04:45, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * And on... Thefourdotelipsis 23:06, 22 October 2007 (UTC)

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * :D Thefourdotelipsis 15:31, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) "Master torturer," indeed. &mdash;Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 01:23, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 03:03, 28 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) "Dark Vendetta featured Tremayne as the central character, and it provided a degree back story for the High Inquisitor" What is a degree backstory? --Eyrezer 03:15, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *It's a mistake. Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 04:16, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) As per previous Consensus Track's, cut content is to be included in the main body with the Cutstart and Cutend templates surrounding it. &mdash;Jaymach Ral'Tir (talk) 06:18, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) *Could you please cite which CTs these were? I'm honestly curious. Thefourdotelipsis 06:25, 25 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) **The last CT I know of ended in no consensus. Which in that case meant to keep doing what we've been doing. So per precedent, the cut content should be integrated. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:07, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * It shouldn't have to come to this, but I'll have to formally oppose on rule 9 until the cut content is properly integrated. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:35, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) Main quote needs a source. Also,, the BTS says that elements of Tremayne's backstory contradicted with the prequels. What specific things were contradictory? Otherwise, very nice.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:03, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 08:50, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments

(2 Inqs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 22:43, 24 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:39, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:34, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:52, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * Single source nomination --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 22:43, 24 October 2007 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 20:27, 26 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 01:33, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Janeway 14:47, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4)  &mdash;Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 05:50, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) JMAS 02:55, 30 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Image:Oodbnar.jpg needs sourcing. --Eyrezer 00:26, 27 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * This is one of those rare TOTJ nominations :P --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 20:27, 26 October 2007 (UTC)

(2 Inq/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nomination by Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 21:59, 26 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Cactuar83 21:49, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  &mdash;Graestan ( This party's over ) 15:04, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Thefourdotelipsis 01:36, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * OK, you might need to follow the sectioning precedent set by Arbra. Thefourdotelipsis 01:15, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) *Is this better? I tried to emulate the Arbra entry more, but I am not certain if this is what you were looking for. Thanks. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 04:16, 28 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) **Fauna section is probably more suited to "Inhabitants". A link might be needed for the Government section. Also, perhaps some more suitable images could be found, and placed in more relevant sections. But we're getting there. Thefourdotelipsis 23:48, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) ***Moved Fauna to Inhabitants, added link for Government, added some images and moved a couple around to better fit the text. Also added Immigrated Species to Inhabitants, since I thought it was important to mention as a follow-up of what is posted in the infobox at the moment. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 20:20, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) From the battered desk of Four Dot:
 * 5) * OK, image next to the infobox squashes the text something terrible, so just remove that first pic.
 * 6) **Done. Moved it to later in the article. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Eh...it looks like it's still there. Image:Manaansoceans.jpg is the one I'm talking about. Thefourdotelipsis 22:20, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Sorry. I thought I had moved it.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:32, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) * Infobox needs to be fully ref'd for that matter.
 * 10) **Whoops&hellip; Fixed. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) * "These pods, however, were not always filled with water as adult Selkath could breathe air without being submersed." - I don't quite follow. Could be worded better.
 * 12) **Is this better? Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) * "marvelous" is POV.
 * 14) **Fixed. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 15) * "Upon her visit to Manaan, Bastila Shan commented that finding something on the ocean floor would be nearly impossible. According to her, much of the planet was uncharted and unknown, even to the native Selkath." - Personally, I don't think it bodes well to doubt a source or throw it in shady light just because it's IU.
 * 16) **Is this wording better? Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 17) * For the Revan bit, you might need to use the "Light side choice assumption" template.
 * 18) **Done. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:24, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 19) * "By a century after the Jedi Civil War, at least two Selkath had sat on the Jedi Council" - Fanon. Shadows and Light is set after the Great Sith War, not the Jedi Civil War. And it's the Dantooine Council. And this has little relevance to Manaan at any rate.
 * 20) **Fixed. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 21) * Image:ManaanWalls1319.jpg needs to be cropped better.
 * 22) **Fixed. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:35, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 23) * "Around 5 ABY Admiral Ackbar began a campaign through the Inner Rim worlds, freeing several planets from the grip of the Empire. It is possible that Manaan was liberated in this campaign even though Manaan was not part of the Republic in the years leading up to the Galactic Civil War.[8] It is unknown if Manaan joined the New Republic following the war." - Total unfounded speculation. Axe it.
 * 24) **Removed. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 25) * "Selkath" section. There's a quote in the prose. Remove it.
 * 26) **Done. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 27) * "Manaan is not the only oceanic planet in the Galaxy. Another is Dac, also known as Mon Calamari. This planet is home to the Mon Calamari and Quarren species. This connection has led to speculation that Admiral Ackbar, a Mon Calamari, was responsible for the liberation of Manaan during his campaign in 5 ABY." Whoa, no way.
 * 28) **I bumped it down to BTS because I didn't think it belonged in the main article. I have no qualms ridding it altogether. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 29) *Thefourdotelipsis 07:21, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 30) **Thanks, 4dot. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 19:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not only is this my first FA nom, it is a restoration project. I'll try to fix any objections as quickly as possible. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) [[Image:NewRepublic.png|20px]] 21:59, 26 October 2007 (UTC)
 * I applied some tweaks to the image number and placement, and I re-linked the article, as well. Please note that some more trivial info, as well as in-universe info that has been explored some in the main body, has been removed from "Behind the scenes." Also, this is a good example of a planet article that is nicely modified to suit the planet's characteristics. Very well done, Fiolli. &mdash;Graestan ( This party's over ) 15:04, 2 November 2007 (UTC)

(1 Inq/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 21:49, 27 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 02:29, 28 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments

(2 Inq/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 23:18, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:12, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 14:49, 30 October 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Janeway 15:39, 30 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * Unsourced statement at the end of the bio. Thefourdotelipsis 23:52, 29 October 2007 (UTC)
 * Whoops. Now sourced --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 23:59, 29 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

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Support
 * 1) As nominator.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:35, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) There's gotta be a better infobox image out there. And...have all the sourcebooks been scoured? I'm surprised that no new information on the character was provided in the Thrawn Trilogy Sourcebook for example. Thefourdotelipsis 05:06, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Very image-light for a character in a comic trilogy. Could definitely use a couple more images. -- Ozzel 06:05, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) *Comics not even listed in his appearances, I might add. -- Ozzel 21:09, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) BTS could be bigger, including expanding on DB info. --Eyrezer 07:02, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * This article looks way different than it did 2 weeks ago. I did a major expansion on it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:35, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

(2 Inq/3 User/5 Total)
Support Oppose
 * 1) Ozzel 18:48, 1 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Lord Hydronium 04:53, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Janeway 16:49, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Bravo Enochf 21:11, 3 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Thefourdotelipsis 06:11, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) "Would" is used too much in the "Raising Luke" section. - Lord Hydronium 00:18, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) *Yikes, you were right. Got rid of a bunch. -- Ozzel 02:34, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) The first half of the "Death" section is a bit too play-by-play. Thefourdotelipsis 22:42, 3 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments

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Support
 * 1) --  AdmirableAckbar  [Talk] 02:34, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:00, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Lord Hydronium 10:40, 2 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:44, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Best plaza article I have ever read. ;-) -- Ozzel 02:56, 4 November 2007 (UTC)

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Comments
 * Without repeating information across various sections (intro, description, and history stating the same thin three times, etc), I highly doubt this would meet the word limit . . . there's certainly not 1000 words worth of material here, even if there is of text. And the text itself is . . . listy. Very short paragraphs of "This happened, then this happened, then here's a list of places related to to it." It's not bad enough for me to oppose, but it's certainly the lest meaty serious FA nom I've seen and I can't bring myself to vote for it either. Havac 04:46, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Havac 03:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:13, 6 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the pounded desk of Four Dot:
 * 2) * "He also looked up to Thrawn, a master tactician and strategist and the founder of the government his father served and whose name remained respected years after his death in 9 ABY leading the Empire against the New Republic." - Seemingly incessant "ands".
 * 3) **God, they were, weren't they? Havac 17:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) * "totaled" is not just informal, it's slang.
 * 5) **Alternate word now in place. Havac 17:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) * "Fel predicted that she would have them pain their fighters individually, and decided to pain his clawcraft black" - I would have assumed "paint", but you've done it twice...?
 * 7) **Damn Ts. Havac 17:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) * "which the ship's dovin basal-generate voids caught" - Should that be "generated"?
 * 9) **Yeah, unless I can call them "degenerate voids". That would be fun. Havac 17:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) * "crush" is informal.
 * 11) **Compared to what? Shall I have to resort to florid, 1860s-love-letter-style terms to describe Zekk's intense longing for the hand of his fair and virtuous lady? Do we have to be that formal? I mean, what word do we have for what Zekk had but a crush? It's not like I'm saying "Zekk, a young man who had long wanted to get in her pants," is it? Havac 17:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 12) ***I'm sure there are other ways of wording it out there. Thefourdotelipsis 22:53, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) *Thefourdotelipsis 08:42, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * I think this would make a better infobox image... --Eyrezer 05:37, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * It's a disembodied head, and it's also not as good a depiction, and it's also from the NEGTC, which is already vastly overused. I tend to favor the current one. More of an infobox feel to me. 17:30, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:01, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 23:10, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 23:56, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * There seems to be a lot of redundant use of the pilot in the third paragraph of the construction section.
 * However, the racers had made enemies of the Fromms who feared that details of the secret base might leak to rival gangs. This sentence reads a little awkwardly.
 * Tig tried to stop their escape, ordering his droid cruisers outside to await them, disabling his sentry droids to prevent them attacking the cruisers. I'm not sure what it is about this sentence, but I had to read it a couple times to make sense of it.
 * They succeeded in damaging the engine on the Sand Sloth but a weapons malfunction on the rundown shuttle allowed the speeder racers to escape before they could destroy them. A weapons malfunction on the Fromm's shuttle? Before who could destroy them? Minor clarification of who's chasing who could be helpful.
 * While she worked on repairing the White Witch, BL-17 attempted to gas Kea, making it look like an accident. Might be better to lead off this sentence with "While Kea worked on repairing..." Somewhat confusing on the first read through, as no mention of Kea doing the repairs was mentioned beforehand. Cull Tremayne 23:32, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * All fixed. I think. Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:49, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 22:48, 5 November 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) An interesting Watson character? I am shocked and chagrined! Thefourdotelipsis 23:44, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

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Comments
 * 1) History. Jorrel [[Image:Wiki-shrinkable.png|20px]] Fraajic 22:48, 5 November 2007 (UTC)