Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Acaadi


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Acaadi

 * Nominated by:  Grunny  ( Talk ) 04:43, 28 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: First contribution to KotOR.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 09:23, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I wonder where they got the idea for a tatooed Zabrak Sith from... Jinzler 21:37, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Great job, rich and compelling Darth Jadious 11:49, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Flawless Victory. —Tommy  [[Image:Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg|17px]] ( Nine two eight one ) 20:45, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:58, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Lord Hydronium 06:44, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:28, 6 April 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) '''Jinzler
 * 2) * He wore red Rally Master armor to help convince the Mandalorians to follow him. You should mention this
 * 3) **Mentioned :).
 * 4) * Acaadi listens in to the Republic agents encounter with Dar and then speaks over the hangar's loud speakers to them, with a slightly different reaction depending upon whether of nor Duqua Dar was redeemed. You should mention this an also perhaps put something in the BTS that there are alternate things that he can say
 * 5) **Added.
 * 6) * Also, you could mention in BTS that if Jirany Sha and Darok-Tho are present in the fight aboard the Champion, then Acaadi taunts them about how he used what he learned from their traditions to corrupt others
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * He made electrical energy disable the bridge crew, you should mention this
 * 9) **Done
 * 10) * He wore a Republic Lieutenants uniform while attacking the Champion of Iridonia, there is no mention of this
 * 11) **Mentioned.
 * 12) * You could mention about how Acaadi spoke to Rokon over one of the ship's cameras
 * 13) **Done.
 * 14) * According to Jiranay Sha's mentor he was apparantly secretive and disruptive as a young Jedi. This could perhaps be added to BTS
 * 15) **Good catch. I added this to the P&T :-).
 * 16) * Page 13 says that, while at the hangar, he sensed the Republic agents approaching, so ordered the hangar's guards to withdraw from the exterior of the hangar, as he preferred to have the agents encounter Dar inside it. You could add something on this
 * 17) **Added
 * 18) *Nice work, I remember creating this page, so it's good to see it grow up --Jinzler 21:29, 28 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) **Thank you for the review, Jinzler. Let me know if you see something else you want to see improved :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:15, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) I suspect there is a word missing in this quote: "I'm sorry, Admiral, but you're too late, as your Jedi friends. Again." Also, I added some red links, which means there are now some in the intro paragraph... --Eyrezer 22:21, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) *Fixed quote and created the articles.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:15, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) Toprawa:
 * 23) * A brief description for why he turned to the dark side in the intro would be preferable: "Acaadi became a Sith agent at the beginning of the Jedi Civil War"
 * 24) **Added.
 * 25) * This paragraph is just verbatim copy of the introduction's text, which should be avoided as a general rule. Please reword a bit to mix it up: "Acaadi became a Sith agent at the beginning of the Jedi Civil War, which began when Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Revan and his apprentice Darth Malak led an invasion of the Galactic Republic in 3,959 BBY. In this role, Acaadi developed a reputation as a corrupter of Jedi and Republic citizens or supporters alike."
 * 26) **Reworded the intro :).
 * 27) * I'm not sure the "despite" works here. It seems like it would be "because of" his interest in non-Jedi teachings, no? "When Acaadi was a young Jedi, Jirany Sha's Luka Sene mentor considered him to be secretive and disruptive, despite his interest in non-Jedi Force knowledge."
 * 28) **Despite is right, I think I just worded it badly :P.
 * 29) * Additionally, this reference makes it seem like Acaadi and Jirany Sha have a previous familiarity with each other, but perhaps I'm reading this incorrectly. Can we clarify this at all to explain how Sha's teacher knows Acaadi? "When Acaadi was a young Jedi, Jirany Sha's Luka Sene mentor considered him to be secretive and disruptive" Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:38, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) **Reworded. Thanks for the review, Tope :D.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 01:50, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 32) * You should speak of Revan's turnabout in the intro and bio instead of just jumping to referring to him as DLotS.
 * 33) **How's it looking now? :)
 * 34) * The references to the Champion of Iridonia as "the capital ship of the Republic fleet" are confusing. Do you mean the flagship? Do you suppose the authors meant that? Were there other capital ships?
 * 35) **Yes I believe they meant flagship, and it has been changed. Thanks for reviewing, Graestan :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 09:29, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) * Graestan ( Talk ) 23:30, 5 April 2009 (UTC)

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