Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Salissian


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Salissian

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 14:19, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I kinda feel sorry for them...

(3 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 20:28, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 23:07, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) ~ SavageBob 05:14, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 06:40, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:12, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:29, April 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * These, and two others he killed, before slowly being overwhelmed by Confederacy forces. Sounds a little wierd when reading it quickly. Reword.
 * 3) **Got that during my copy-edit; we edit-conflicted. :P Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 23:09, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Heh :D SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:13, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) * Three members of the Salissian special forces What are the Salissian special forces? Some organisation? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:08, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **I've linked to special forces. There is no real info provided on them. Presumably they were mercenaries with better training... --Eyrezer 06:09, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ***As it is, the Salissian special forces sounds like the official name of an organisation; due to its naming, it would need an article regardless of the amount of info available. If it's not an actual name then could you reword it into something like a special force of Salissians, to make it unspecific?
 * 8) ****Red-linked instead. --Eyrezer 06:11, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 10) * They're apparently ugly? Maybe this should be under "Appearance and biology," which is currently empty? It is probably also worth adding an A&B section that says that they are mainline Humans biologically. ~ SavageBob 04:16, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **I actually think the ugly comment refers to their demeanor, not their appearance. It picks up where the lead quote ends. --Eyrezer 04:58, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) "Ji, as a former Teräs Käsi champion, was a deadly melee fighter, before working as a combat instructor for the Republic." The chronology is unclear here; you're saying that he is a fighter and yet before worked as a combat instructor for the Republic, and the sentence is overall rather choppy.  CC7567  (talk) 05:27, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) *Unchopified. --Eyrezer 06:09, April 5, 2010 (UTC)

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