Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Savuud Thimram


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Savuud Thimram

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 03:48, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 04:47, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:29, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 11:02, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 10:51, 19 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  11:26, 31 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 21:39, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Attack of the Clone
 * 2) * "A Universal Energy Cage brought the captive to the Citadel, where it was received by Thimram, Ap-Llewff, and several other Dark Side Adepts." Do you mean "where he was received"?
 * 3) **Yes. Fixed.
 * 4) * "Upon exiting, Skywalker attacked several of the Adepts with the Force, claiming that he would enter the Citadel of his own volition." The "upon exiting" is rather awkward because it isn't specifically stated where he exited from.
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) *That's it; good job.  CC7567  (talk) 03:59, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **I thank you for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 04:25, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) It's Floyd!:
 * 9) * "effectively became one of Palpatine's most faithful servants." Is effectively the right word choice?
 * 10) **I turfed it.
 * 11) * "young Thimram's" POV.
 * 12) **No...it isn't?
 * 13) * "Later that year, Palpatine was definitively killed" Definitively?
 * 14) **Yes, definitively. The fact that he has died several times before is kinda irrelevant to Thimram, so I've left as something that that is technically correct, and doesn't stray too far from the focus, but will potentially make the reader go "Hmm, what does that mean? Maybe I should read up on that event." To that end, I've pipelinked it.
 * 15) * Quote for P&T?
 * 16) **Nada. The only thing of interest that he says is the lead quote.
 * 17) *Nice job.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:37, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 08:40, 11 May 2009 (UTC)

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