Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Kalyn Farnmir


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Kalyn Farnmir

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 09:49, 14 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And another one. This one's a GA that I just beefed up a tad.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)   Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 18:31, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  15:46, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Another painless fourdotelipsis read. —Tommy9281  [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 15:40, 15 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:16, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:13, 27 August 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Pasta Bowl of Fiolli:
 * 2) *A couple of quick things:
 * 3) ** "Together, they were able to claim the bounty on Disciples of Psusan leader Scri Oscuro's head." This suggests that the bounty was to kill Oscuro. Please clarify so that when the priest is mentioned later in the intro it does not provide a moment of confusion.
 * 4) ***Fixed.
 * 5) ** "But her desire to bring criminals to justice persisted, and as such, she became a bounty hunter." This sentence shouldn't start with a conjunction. I am aware of, but honestly, I wasn't sure what you would prefer to have this sentence read since the successive commas in the middle of the sentence limit options as it stands now.
 * 6) ***Tweaked.
 * 7) ** "Shee was also to receive a substantial from the Psusans for setting Farnmir up." Substantial what?
 * 8) ***Fee.
 * 9) ** "Farnmir and Shee met on[Nar Shaddaa, and fought to the death. Farnmir corrected her mistake in letting Shee live on Coruscant, and killed the slicer." Seems to be some redundancy here.
 * 10) ***Fixed.
 * 11) *Otherwise, nice article 4dot. I'm beginning to really like all the WtS entries. &mdash;  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:30, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Thankee. :) Thefourdotelipsis 02:17, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***No problem!  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 18:31, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) Toprawa:
 * 15) * Please kill the speculation: "a skill which likely served her well during her time in the Kuati Security Forces"
 * 16) **Axed. Thefourdotelipsis 22:44, 21 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * Please ask around (Borsk probably knows) and see if you can't figure out which specific FF she's in. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:25, 18 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) **That would be 96. Added. Thefourdotelipsis 08:28, 24 August 2008 (UTC)

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