Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Ylenic It'kla


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Ylenic It'kla

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 08:52, 10 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You'd think he'd be more interesting.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 14:36, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Jedi Master Walon 00:20, 28 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:38, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 13:20, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Good read!  —Xwing328 (Talk) 06:35, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:41, 30 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Can you be more specific as to the FactFiles entries? Ie, the format in the current CT. --Eyrezer 16:50, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Things
 * 3) * "It'kla, insisting that his talents for discussion would prove useful, joined his friend, and another Jedi, a general who It'kla knew as "Desertwind", led them." This sentence ends funny if I'm not mistaken. Who led them? And if you're just interjecting that long bit into, "It'kla led them", then I'd like to see the sentence split up more so that it isn't so confusing at first glance.
 * 4) **Desertwind led them; I broke it up, so it should be clearer.
 * 5) ***That makes a bit more sense then.
 * 6) * The search section could do with a little more clarification. Suarbi links to the star. Is it meant to link to Suarbi 7? Since that article says that Suarbi 7 is a gas giant, how could It'kla and friends talk to the locals there? Also, you introduce Susevfi without telling us that it's a moon of Suarbi. Cull Tremayne 16:36, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **I have no idea about Suarbi; POTJ just says "Suarbi" and doesn't clarify. Added a bit that Susevfi was a moon. - Lord Hydronium 23:26, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 9) * "It'kla rarely used his lightsaber, preferring to solve situations with negotiation or diplomacy." Seems to fit more in P&T; didn't move it there in case you had an explanation. Regardless, this and the previous sentence aren't really all that pertinent to the bio.
 * 10) * Contextify Secura on first mention in Bio section.
 * 11) * I believe we generally use separate links in image captions. Please link appropriately.
 * 12) * Conflict on Baltizaar should be linked.
 * 13) * "Eleven years after It'kla's death, A'Kla provided it to the Jensaarai, a group of Force-users formed out of Tyris' teachings; though they had been laboring under a misapprehension about the Jedi and their motives for decades, after seeing the events from It'kla's point of view, the Force sect was able to be coaxed into once again opening dialogue with the Jedi Order." Massive run-on.
 * 14) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **All addressed on IRC or in the article. - Lord Hydronium 02:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * "For almost his entire life, It'kla was friends with the Corellian Jedi Nejaa Halcyon" doesn't work in light of the fact that It'kla survived Halcyon by 20 years or so. Thefourdotelipsis 04:41, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Reworded it...I'm not sure how great the replacement is, so tell me if it still needs work. - Lord Hydronium 02:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Now that's what I call a succinct P&A. I'm guessing we don't know what new Force techniques he developed to escape Palpatine's agents? Also, is there a link to the unknown Dark Jedi that Desertwind fought? Cull Tremayne 16:36, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * No to the first. To the second: the one on Susevfi? The mention of his opponent is pipelinked to Dustrose. - Lord Hydronium 23:26, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Right, but I thought Ylenic fought Dustrose. Do we know who Desertwind fought? We don't have an article for that unnamed darksider do we? Cull Tremayne 14:36, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Oh, Desertwind. Sorry, misread it. No, we don't seem to have an article on them. - Lord Hydronium 01:44, 28 December 2008 (UTC)