Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Kef


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Kef

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:46, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Last one (for today :P)

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 19:40, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 22:07, November 11, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  16:24, December 4, 2011 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) There'll be another time...
 * 2) * Same objections as above.
 * 3) **See above.
 * 4) ***See above :P  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:34, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) * This seems to be a copy of the others. You even accidently called him "Red" once. :P You'll need to go through and reword the article some so it doesn't sound like an exact copy. -- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 15:50, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * 6) **Yes, it's pretty hard to write one article seven times. I tried to reword some parts, please take a look and say if it's fine.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:56, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) ***I know from experience that it can be a royal pain. Good job! Just take one more look above.-- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 15:59, November 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * 8) Jang
 * 9) * If he's a clone trooper, mentioning that he's a Human male is quite redundant here. And if he's a clone commando, it would be the same. I believe in this intro/bio paragrah, you can mention that he's was only a clone commando, and avoid mentioning the term clone trooper for consistency.
 * 10) **See above.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:02, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Still remains  JangFett  (Talk) 17:14, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 12) * "Kef was killed, however, during the war—which lasted between 22 and 19 BBY—and was later mourned, along with all other clone commandos who had been killed since the start of the war, by the Mandalorian training sergeants Kal Skirata and Walon Vau." I can see this sentence being separated into two sentences because as it stands it can be confusing. Mention that he died sometime during the war in one sentence, and then go ahead and say his death was mourned by ___. Also be sure to paraphrase your wording, Lee.
 * 13) **See above.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:02, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 14) ***Still remains  JangFett  (Talk) 17:14, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 15) * Is there any reason why you're mentioning his height in the can-approved intro? Creating a section wouldn't be too much for this. Also, for the nickname in the intro, his nickname is Kef, not "Kef" (notice the quotation marks). Keep the punctuation out of the wiki bold formatting.  JangFett  (Talk) 20:48, November 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * 16) **See above.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:02, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 17) ***Lee, I did not say to remove them.  JangFett  (Talk) 17:14, November 14, 2011 (UTC)