Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 6) Per AgriCorps consensus, nominators are restricted to four nominations on the GAN page at any one time. Once one nomination is removed from the page as either successful or unsuccessful, another can be added.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;two of which must be AgriCorps votes&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 2 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Lens Reekeene

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:27, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A Rebel General to be used as a NPC in a RPG Campaign, and part of my own mini-project. Currently 1200 words, probably I'll try for a FAN later.

(1 ACs/0 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 18:49, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Context on "Flankers"
 * 3) **Added; OS says little about that.
 * 4) * In the intro, you vaguely explained how he became a prison of the Empire, but in the bio, it's not even mentioned. "Sartran was disbanded by the Galactic Empire and the mercenaries employed by the company were imprisoned under false charges of conspiracy. While in prison," The jump from "being disbanded by the Empire" to being in prison is rough.
 * 5) **Better?
 * 6) * "While in prison, Lens met engineer Mikka Reekeene, also a former employee of Sartran. Lens and Mikka Reekeene got married in jail." This sounds like Mikka was also in prison for whatever reason. Was he an engineer in prison or a worker in that prison?
 * 7) **You are right. Better?
 * 8) * Try to add subsections within the bio. It will be more, concisely organized and well formatted.
 * 9) **Better?
 * 10) ***Much; also, is their any relevant quotes? If not, then it's fine.
 * 11) * If Lens was free in 11 BBY, how could she have joined the Rebellion? It wasn't established until 2 BBY.
 * 12) **Right. Typo in my notes, corrected: She was released in 3 BBY and soon after that (apparently some months), she joined the Rebellion.
 * 13) *More to come. Also, please watch your linking. I'll look through the article once more.  JangFett  (Talk) 19:32, March 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **More linking, and thank you for your review. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:01, March 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) The Grand Master
 * 16) * Seeing some grammar issues throughout the article. This is getting old.
 * 17) **Try. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:34, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Better, but still seeing several mistakes; a couple examples: "Circa 0 ABY, Reekeene also led the Roughnecks in "Operation Retribution," which simultaneously damaged assets of the Empire, while the Alliance suffered the minimum damage." "Also around this time, General Reekeene joined her husband, Lazith'chika and Rebel Lieutenant Am Serro onboard their mobile headquarters&hellip" (<--comma usage; this currently grammatically implies that Lazith'chika and Rebel Lieutenant Am Serro were Reekeene's husband.) Also, please see my note below on the linking; it applies here as well. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:10, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****Might be better. I hope I could find every one. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:24, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *****You only fixed the one example I left on your talk page. Some wording issues remain. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:44, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) ******General overwrite and complete copy-edit, even if those things rarely work. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:29, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) * Why is there a birth date given in the infobox but not in the intro and bio?
 * 23) **Added.
 * 24) * Why is there no dating of events in the intro?
 * 25) **Added.
 * 26) * "an Irregular group of Rebel soldiers." This makes it sound as if the soldiers themselves were irregular, i.e. they were strange beings. Please reword so that you actually say what an "Irregular" means in this case.
 * 27) **Changed.
 * 28) * Why is the quote given outside of any section? Currently, the section which you have the quote has no prose. Please move it.
 * 29) **Changed.
 * 30) * Does the OS say why Sartran was disbanded, or why the mercs were imprisoned under false charges?
 * 31) **Added.
 * 32) * "Later, Mikka Reekeene was released from jail, because of a management mistake." This grammatically says that it was a mistake for him to be released. Is that true?
 * 33) **Yes. Reworded.
 * 34) * "and her less political husband followed her." What exactly do you mean by "less political," and by "followed her" do you mean that he, too, joined the Alliance? This isn't very clear.
 * 35) **Changed.
 * 36) * 2nd paragraph of "origins" section needs to be reworded more to follow Lens' POV. The first couple sentences sound like the article's suddenly switched to one about Mikka.
 * 37) **Changed.
 * 38) * Page for the local moff? If there is none, please create and link.
 * 39) **Added.
 * 40) * Page for Green Squad's mission to Abonshee?
 * 41) **Stubbed.
 * 42) ***Quick question&mdash;was the mission successful, or is this known? Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:55, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) ****Added. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 19:25, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) * "None of the other officers objected anything to her." This doesn't make snese.
 * 45) **Removed.
 * 46) * Linking mistakes throughout. Please make sure not only that everything is linked, but also that everything is linked cleanly and properly.
 * 47) **I think I've found what you mean. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:27, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ***Still seeing some mistakes, inlcuding instances of underlinking. (Another hint for proper linking: refuelling is incorrect) Remember, when possible, please try to link things in the article if you can, as opposed to linking them in quotes; for instance, I'm sure you can work at least Alliance Intelligence and Godking into the article prose, even if you just pipelink. Also why do you have "limit of missions" linked to the page "23rd?" This makes absolutely no sense, especially sense you just got done saying that the limit of missions was 20. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:28, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) ****Underlinking: Try.
 * 50) *****You have not added any links other than the ones that were in the quotes. This remains. Again&mdash;normally this would fall under "sofixit," but the fact of the matter is, this is a consistent problem with your noms; please take the time to correct it. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:10, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 51) ******Again. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:24, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) *******You've only fixed the two examples I left on your talk page. This remains. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:44, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 53) ********Two more: Commanding officer and Alliance recruitment agent. I can't see anything else missing. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:29, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 54) ****Intel & Godking: Included in the prose.
 * 55) ****23rd: Survivors of 20 missions facing mandatory retirement were only a 23% of the agents, thus the nickname; article created but no change here.
 * 56) * "Fortunately, the Empire was outwitted." POV.
 * 57) **Removed.
 * 58) * "to reach a meeting with the Alliance commanding officers of the sector." What sector? Is this still the Fakir sector?
 * 59) **Yes. Added.
 * 60) * "keep them nervous" Keep who nervous? Also, lots of the wording in the P/T sounds like it may have been taken almost verbatim from the source. I am unfamiliar with the material, but please check and make sure you don't use the same words as the source.
 * 61) **Changed.
 * 62) ***What do you mean by making the Empire "feel unsure about the Roughnecks?" Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:55, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 63) ****Sorry: Insecure, not unsure. Changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 19:25, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 64) *****This still doesn't really make sense; how is she making the Empire "insecure?" Maybe something more along the lines of "she did her best to trouble/pester the Empire," or something of the sort? Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:35, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 65) ******Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:44, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 66) *******Grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:28, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 67) ********Now? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:35, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 68) * "tell others only what they needed to know." What others?
 * 69) **Changed.
 * 70) * Please check the format of the BTS quote. The source seems to be misformatted.
 * 71) **Changed.
 * 72) * "along with another Campaign" What other campaign? At least pipelink it.
 * 73) **Detailed.
 * 74) * Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 14:16, March 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 75) **Most done; still looking for the grammar part. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:21, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 76) One more for now: In the intro you say "Lens Reekeene was a female Human born in 54 BBY.", although it's the same in the first sentence of the bio. Mind rewording it?  JangFett  (Talk) 19:36, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 77) *Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:44, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 78) The Grand Master II
 * 79) * Nothing in the intro that isn't also in the body, please.
 * 80) **Changed --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 81) * Very stiff, choppy prose throughout the article.
 * 82) **Modified. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 83) ***Better, but for the first paragraph of the intro and the first paragraph of the bio this remains. See my edits to the second paragraph of the bio for an example of how to fix this. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:13, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 84) ****Have a look. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:37, April 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 85) *****Much better, but please check your grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:07, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 86) ******Reworded. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:02, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 87) * "The Reekeenes and Lazith'chika were the highest-ranking members of the Roughnecks. They briefed the squads and answered their questions. Once briefed for a mission, a member of the Roughnecks could not speak to anyone except the Reekeenes or Lazith'chika, as a security measure." This seems very randomly placed; it doesn't really follow or lead into the surrounding paragraphs.
 * 88) **Moved. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 89) * In the "Operation Retribution" section, there are some inappropriate uses of "would be." Remember, this is a future-tense phrase, and should only be used when you are explaining the formation of a plan of what is going to happen (like you do here: "The Roughnecks would simultaneously raid several Imperial targets"), and even then you should follow it up with what did happen.
 * 90) **Changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 91) *I'll continue with my review once you address these. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 18:45, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 92) * "Once Retribution was over, Reekeene sent the Long Shot to the planet Iyuta. The Empire had a communication center there and Reekeene wanted a listening device on it. Reekeene had a contact on Iyuta, but the Empire had already found, killed and replaced this person, as a part of a plot to follow the Rebel agents to their headquarters. However, the Empire was outwitted." The content of this is rather ambiguous. It cuts off rather short, leaving the reader confused. How was the Empire outwitted? In what was the Empire outwitted? Did Lens ever get the listening device on the planet? Also, please specify better why it was a big deal that the Empire killed and replaced Lens' contact. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:13, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 93) **More detail added, but OS only gives an overview of the adventure; individual Gamemasters are supposed to develop, complete and detail the given outlines. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:37, April 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 94) ***That's fine, but please check your grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:07, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 95) ****Reworded. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:02, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 96) Attack of the Clone
 * 97) * Did she officially take "Reekeene" as her married name before being known simply as "Lens"? If so, that needs to be clarified in both the intro and body, because the article is currently leaves a lot of room for misinterpretation regarding the shift from Lens to Reekeene. Additionally, perhaps beginning the intro with "Lens Reekeene, originally named Lens before marrying" or something might help to clarify this issue.
 * 98) **Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:11, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 99) * "Once there, the Imperial asked for a rescue." A rescue from what/for whom?  CC7567  (talk) 20:35, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 100) **Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:11, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Thirsty Bantha

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 07:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Eh. --Imperialles 07:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) After a short IRC review. -- 1358  (Talk) 08:08, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 02:25, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) We should consider creating WookieeProject: Drinking establishments. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Good read.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:24, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:10, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Duchess looks it over
 * 2) * When you say in the into, "lest something bad happen to Thirsty Bantha", what do you mean by that? What bad thing precisely was going to happen? Also, the entire article isn't sourced at all. In the "History" section, 4th paragragh, you say that "who demanded to be served mass amounts of drinks", did you mean "massive amounts of drinks"? Duchess Jade  Republic Emblem.svg (Completely Coruscanti) 23:27, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **The article only has one source, so does not need to be sourced. --Eyrezer 02:25, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Per Eyrezer. The game does not specify what bad thing would happen. The usage of mass is perfectly acceptable. --Imperialles 06:59, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Ah, I didn't know about that particular sourcing rule. Other than that, great job. Duchess Jade  Republic Emblem.svg (Completely Coruscanti) 18:13, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Farlstendoiro in the Star Wars, Star Wars Cantiiiina
 * 7) * "A fifteen day deadline" or "a fifteen-day deadline"?
 * 8) * Underlinking: Credits, Gamorrean, maybe "helper droid" if it is some kind of specific technology.
 * 9) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:54, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fifteen-day indeed. Credits is linked to once in the intro, once in the body. Linked to Gamorrean. Helper droid is not a specific technology. --Imperialles 08:04, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) Cylka:
 * 12) *fifteen-day deadline to cough up the money - Cough up is a bit colloquial.
 * 13) *Luckily for Robb - Luckily is a bit POV. If he was the one who thought himself lucky, then add that in.
 * 14) *In the Description section, you introduce Nia Adea and the reader isn't sure who she is. It might be better to avoid mentioning her in that section.
 * 15) *Unfortunately for Robb - Same thing, unfortunately is a bit POV.
 * 16) *I think that a little context for Wunda should be included. I'm assuming that he was the local crimelord, since the Hutts usually were. If I'm correct, that would be good to include, just to show that he was important.
 * 17) *After spending the entire day in the cantina, he left without paying. - This sentence regarding Wunda doesn't seem to connect the first part of the paragraph to the rest of the paragraph. Would it be possible to connect it to the next sentence by saying something like, Wunda's drinking binge didn't hurt the Thirsty Bantha's finances or something?
 * 18) *In the intro you mention that the Thirsty Bantha operated around the time of the Galactic Empire, that it was named after the bantha, and that Adea was Human, but not in the main body.
 * 19) *Interesting little cantina you picked to write about. Cylka  -talk- 21:29, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **I believe I have addressed your objections. Have a look. --Imperialles 21:42, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) "Customer capacity was increased from two tables to six under her supervision." Under whose supervision? I assume you mean Adea, but as is, there's no context.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:13, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *Nice catch. Fixed. --Imperialles 13:26, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Unidentified Jedi (Endar Spire)

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:25, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: 331 words.

(2 ACs/5 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Identified vote (Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:59, April 21, 2010 (UTC))
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:47, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:33, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) As if this needed another normal user vote.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:18, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Ruthless Xero 05:12, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:02, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 01:23, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Unidentified Farlstendoiro (GAN page)
 * 2) * You can mention what caused the explosion of the wall - even if it is simply "the battle" or "a blast from an enemy ship" or anything.
 * 3) **Added.
 * 4) *GANom tag added. Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:37, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thank you. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:56, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Lee attacks
 * 7) * You give context on Revan and Ulgo twice. Remove one of it.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:51, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **Done. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Soresu remembers creating this article last year
 * 10) * Do we actually know that the duel was short? IIRC, they are already fighting by the time you open that door.
 * 11) **Crap, I thought I got that. Removed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) ***During the battle, she engaged a Sith aboard the vessel. She killed him during a lightsaber duel that followed though the wall section behind her exploded moments later, killing her. Chronologically, by the time you start that second sentence, the duel has already begun; there is no need for during a lightsaber duel that followed. The fact that it involved lightsabers could be moved into the previous sentence.
 * 13) ****Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) * Though she was victorious, eliminating the Sith, she was killed before Trask Ulgo and Revan, two crewmembers who had just entered the hallway, could speak with her. Moments after killing the Sith, the Spire took damage from the ongoing battle and the the wall she stood beside exploded. As Lee caught, Trask and Ulgo already have context. Also, you state the events of her death twice for some reason. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:01, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **I got rid of the first context, it doesn't really have to do with her. As for the latter part, I did that because the sentence would run-on otherwise. The first sentence says she died, the second says how. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ***This stands, again due to chronology. If you're going to state her death and the reason for it, please do it in one sentence. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:33, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) ****Alright. Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) *****Now the sentence is too long. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:42, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ******How about now? If it's still too long, the Revan/Ulgo mention doesn't neccisarily /have/ to be there. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:37, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *******I tried my best to make it work. It isn't perfect, but I couldn't think of a better way to put it for some reason. Of course, you can edit it to fit your personal style. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:47, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) Just one issue, which caused me to strike my support of the article. The fact that Bandon was Malak's Shadow Hand should be sourced to the Knights of the Old Republic Campaign Guide.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:32, May 1, 2010 (UTC}
 * 22) *Good catch, Kasra. Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 16:33, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **Very good work.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:03, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) The Grand Master
 * 25) * The article's sectioning does not currently follow the LG.
 * 26) **How so? NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:41, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) ***Because of the "History" instead of "Biography," I'd say.  CC7567  (talk) 06:47, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) ****Fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:02, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) *****Thanks Chack. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 01:30, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) * The bio is barely any longer than the intro. Please cut down the intro some.
 * 31) **Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:03, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) ***Please check your grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 18:37, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) ****Chack got it, but please be careful of this when making corrections in the future. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 01:23, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) *****He edit conflicted me (And so did you ;P) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 01:30, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) * "In that year, as a Jedi" Is the "as a Jedi" really necessary? You just said that she became a Jedi Master. I find it pretty obvious, in that case, that she's a Jedi.
 * 36) **Removed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:41, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 37) * "Trask Ulgo and Revan, two crew members" Crew members of which ship?
 * 38) **Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:41, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 39) * From what did the wall behind her sustain heavy damage? The opposing ship's lasers?
 * 40) **Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:41, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) * Major tense-shifting issues in the BTS.
 * 42) **Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:41, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) * Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 18:52, May 7, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) I'm not absolutely certain about this, but I vaguely remember that this Jedi's appearance can change to another player portrait if you pick the original portrait for your player character. Could you check on that? JethLordMaster Ying yang copy.jpg (Xia Order) 21:50, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *You're right. Added to the article. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:20, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

Lock (Eeth Koth)

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:25, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A clone each day keeps the doctor away. One TCW GAN should be on this page

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Support
 * 1) Good work, Lee. -- 1358  (Talk) 15:03, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Well done. I'd like to see more noms of this quality, Lee. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:25, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Airdate for Grievous Intrigue? --  1358  (Talk) 10:59, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:04, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) *Just to let you know, this is not a valid objection. It is completely up to the writer whether or not to put things like the airdates or release dates of sources in articles. The only time the realease/airdate would be needed is for articles about the source itself. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 14:47, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Fett
 * 5) * In the intro, you say the the Confederate forces were led by Grievous's Separatist destroyer. Reading this sentence, it sounds like the actual destroyer was leading them. Can you clarify that Grievous was leading the troops, onboard the destroyer?
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) * Is there a way that you can reword this sentence in the bio: "Koth's Venator-class Star Destroyer, with Lock on board, was attacked by..."' It's very similiar to the sentence in the intro.
 * 8) **Changed.
 * 9) ***Removing Lock and changing Venator-class Star Destroyer to just Venator doesn't work. Please reword the sentence.
 * 10) ****Eh we only know he served on the Destroyer under Koth. It's correct.
 * 11) *****Please reword the sentence. It's currently the same as the intro's, only it has a few words missing.
 * 12) ******Ah now. Reworded.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 07:52, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) *"Lock and his troops prepared defensive positions at one of the ship's airlocks in order to repel the enemy forces"" How did they know that the super battle droids were about to enter their ship? It sounds like they knew unexpectedly without someone telling them, and then in the next sentence, the supers attacked.
 * 14) **Better ?
 * 15) ***"Lock and his troops prepared defensive positions at one of the ship's airlocks and shortly after this, B2 super battle droids used an armored docking tube to board the cruiser and poured into the Republic vessel." How did Lock and his men know that the supers were about to board the Star Destroyer? Also, please check your grammar in this sentence.
 * 16) ****We don't know how the knew it.
 * 17) *****You can mention that the Separatist ship was preparing to board Koth's Star Destroyer, and that set up Lock to initiate their defensive positions. You even mentioned they tried to stop the droids from boarding the ship in the P&T, too.
 * 18) ******Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:08, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) * "Although he and his troops did their best," This is too POV orientated.
 * 20) **Fixed.
 * 21) ***"Although he and his troops did tried to" Try to what?
 * 22) ****Bah.
 * 23) *I'll give it another look after this.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:09, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) **Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:38, May 7, 2010 (UTC)

Mikoan

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 11:19, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A species from an ambiguous source. This actually has a nice tie in to the movies that I don't think we've seen before.

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Support
 * 1) Green Wroonians? ~ SavageBob 15:58, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:59, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 2) * "his own splinter faction" of what? That's it! ~ SavageBob 23:17, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Addressed. --Eyrezer 11:53, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Soresu
 * 5) * Only one from me: As turbolaser fire and concussion missiles rained on the Mikoans, they eventually sued for peace, As is synonymous with "while", and indicates that events occur at the same time. "Eventually" contradicts this. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:02, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **Should be addressed now. Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 08:36, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) AC
 * 8) *You mention Gellefon in the second paragraph of Mikoans in the galaxy but it's not explained earlier that this is the planet Jade was on. If you could clarify for the average reader that'd be wonderful.
 * 9) *from the Bts - ...published in Polyhedron 86 in 1993. The Polyhedron magazine become canonical in 2003. Prior to this, it was considered unofficial. Nitpicky, but I know when I first read this I assumed that all of the magazine became official in 2003 and was confused why the article was ambiguously canon. If you could say that articles in the magazine prior to 2003 were still considered unofficial, that'd be great.
 * 10) * Also, can you mention the cannonicity of "The Galaxy Dragon and Crew"?
 * 11) * Interesting read. A Christian 00:05, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) **All three should now be addressed. Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 08:36, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

OLR-4

 * Nominated by:  NAYAYEN : TALK 14:49, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A somewhat introspective OOM droid from Cloak of Deception.

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  JangFett  (Talk) 23:00, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:10, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) A bit of a funny droid.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  18:45, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:33, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) -- 1358  (Talk) 15:16, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Just one: You say "The freighter was in the orbit of the Outer Rim planet Dorvalla, loading lommite ore that had been mined on the planet's surface." and then in the next sentence, you start the transition as: "Once carried into orbit". Seeing that you said the freighter was in orbit in the former sentence, the latter doesn't sound right. Please, clarify this.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:44, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Hopefully clarified. Thanks for pointing it out.  NAYAYEN : TALK 20:20, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Nice.  JangFett  (Talk) 23:00, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) "When the sound of pressure relief valves was heard&hellip;" Was heard by whom? OLR-4? Otherwise, nice work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:59, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

CT-3423

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:08, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part one of my Execute Order 66 project

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Support
 * 1)  JangFett  (Talk) 17:13, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Please note that "whom" is always preceded by a preposition. -- 1358  (Talk) 18:59, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * "While on a speeder patrol after the battle with Jedi Master Stass Allie, CC-8826 and CT-3423 received Order 66, which branded the Jedi as traitors to the Republic." They received Order 66? How could they "receive" it?
 * 3) **Clarified.
 * 4) * "CC-8826 and CT-3423 then opened fire on Allie's speeder, destroying it and killing the Human Jedi General" What did they use to fire on her? Assuming they used their BARC speeder's blaster cannons, correct? Please fix this in the bio, too, please.
 * 5) **Clarified.
 * 6) * "CT-3423 and Neyo made a BARC speeder patrol over the marshland battlefield," They made a BARC speeder patrol? Please clarify
 * 7) **What is not clear about this sentence.
 * 8) ***Nevermind, I took care of it during my copy-edit. "made" doesn't work there, Lee.
 * 9) * "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66" Again, how did he "receive" it?
 * 10) **Clarified.
 * 11) ***See the last objection.
 * 12) * "[...]and after informing CT-3423, both fell back" "Fell back" doesn't work here.
 * 13) **Replaced with a synonym.
 * 14) * "CT-3423 was ultimately loyal to the Republic and shot his Jedi General down on Saleucami." How was he "loyal"? Shooting down his Jedi General doesn't dignify that he was loyal.
 * 15) **Clarified.
 * 16) ***Still remains. Also, now "proven" is repetitive in this sentence. You changed "Republic" to "Empire," which is false.
 * 17) ****Changed back, fixed.
 * 18) *****I didn't say to change it back, Lee. Please reread what I said above.
 * 19) ******Fixed.
 * 20) *******I see no change.
 * 21) ********He was loyal enough to execute his Jedi General he had fought with. If that doesn't makes him loyal to the Republic, I don't know what.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:38, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *********You failed to mention that he was loyal to Palpatine's orders and executed the chancellor's demand of killing his Jedi General, because of Order 66.
 * 23) **********Added.
 * 24) ***********Better, but is there anyway you can reword this, though? "CT-3423 was loyal to the Supreme Chancellor and proved that by carrying out the order to shoot down his Jedi General on Saleucami." You mentioned that he was loyal to Palpatine by carrying out his order of what?
 * 25) ************Better ?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:03, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) *I'll give it another look after this.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:34, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) **Thanks.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:50, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Lee, please take a look at the changes I've made during my second copy-edit.  JangFett  (Talk) 19:18, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) * "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66 over their helm comlinks" You say both clones received the order in the intro, now you say only Neyo received the order. Which one is correct? Note that you say "their," which doesn't make sense.
 * 30) **Actually, the use of "their" is correct. The comlinks belonged to them, so they received the order in "their" comlinks. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 22:51, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Jon, I meant that Lee said in the intro that both received the order, and then in the bio, only Neyo did. If both of them received it, then CT-3423 should be added in as well.  JangFett  (Talk) 22:54, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) ****Ah, sorry, my mistake&mdash;I misinterpreted what you meant. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars )
 * 33) *****No problem. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 22:59, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) ******Not quite sure if both recieved the order. Neyo did it so I wrote that he recieved it.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:13, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) * "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66 over his helm comlinks&mdash;an order for all clone troopers to execute their Jedi officers&mdash;from Supreme Chancellor Palpatine and, after informing CT-3423, both troopers utilized their speeder's blaster cannons to fire on Allie, hitting the rear of the Jedi's Aratech 74-Z speeder." Please take a look at this sentence, Lee. Not only is the context out of place here, but it's confusing. You can cut it down. Take a look at the intro's sentence to help you on this. But, please, paraphrase so it doesn't match the intro's. I've seen you do this quite a lot, Lee.
 * 36) **Removed the context on Palpy.
 * 37) ***I didn't say to remove it. Please reread what I said above.
 * 38) ****Splitted.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:14, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 39) *****I still see no change, Lee. Please read this sentence again, and read what I've said above: "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66 over his helm comlinks&mdash;an order for all clone troopers to execute their Jedi officers&mdash; from Supreme Chancellor Palpatine."
 * 40) ******Fixed.
 * 41) *******You didn't fix anything, Lee.
 * 42) ********now.
 * 43) * "This ignited the reactor of the bike and sent it into a fatal crash," "Ignited" doesn't work here.
 * 44) **Replaced withactivated.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:33, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) ***Actually, the bike would be "activated" if its running. I would say something along the lines of the blaster fire caused the bike to explode. You don't have to describe every detail that you saw in ROTS. Just straight-to-the-point.
 * 46) ****eh, the info about the reactor is from TCSWE and it should be there.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:14, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) *****You failed to mention or source this in the article, then, Lee. If it's in the CSWE, then please source it. You currently have it sourced to Order 66 and ROTS, which assuming are correct, but given that you said it's mentioned in the CSWE, it should be sourced to it as well. The "reactor" bit only, though.  JangFett  (Talk) 16:26, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ******Meh, it was Order 66.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:38, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) *******Which one is correct, Lee? First off, you told me that the information was in CSWE, and now you say it's not there, but in Order 66. If it is Order 66, then please correct the reference in the article.  JangFett  (Talk) 16:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 50) ********It is correct as it is.
 * 51) *********Take a look at the change I made, Lee.
 * 52) The Grand Master
 * 53) *"Through his helmet comlink [&hellip;] and informed CT-3423." Please check this sentence. It does not read correctly.
 * 54) *"&hellip;utilized their BARC speeder's&hellip;" They were on the same speeder? Issue in both the intro and bio.
 * 55) *Why is there no date for any event in the bio or intro? At least date their killing of Allie.
 * 56) *Please make sure all info in the intro is included in the bio.
 * 57) *You say that Allie was on an Aratech 74-Z speeder, but you said earlier that Allie and the clones were on a BARC speeder patrol, and you included Allie as part of the patrol, thus saying that she was on a BARC, too. Which is correct?
 * 58) *"He was given his number in Order 66: Destroy All Jedi" Did he actually not receive a number until the events of this Insider article, as this implies? Or was it just not revealed until then?
 * 59) *"However, in the comic, CT-3423 and Neyo gun Allie down in a rocky environment, while in the film it's in marshland." Could you explain why you present the film's version instead of the comic's version in the article?
 * 60) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 22:38, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Gormak

 * Nominated by: &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 02:46, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first species nom. Looking forward to addressing your objections. Thanks in advance for your reviews!

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Support
 * 1) Good job. --Imperialles 13:01, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Good to see project progress. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 22:48, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Looks good. --Eyrezer 08:48, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Few things:
 * 2) * Gormak in the galaxy: "For this reason, Gormak are generally considered to be mysterious." First of all, wrong tense. Secondly, considered mysterious by who? Clarify, or it could come off as a little POV.
 * 3) **Source text: A MYSTERIOUS SPECIES ON A MYSTERIOUS WORLD, LITTLE IS KNOWN IN THE GREATER GALAXY ABOUT THE GORMAK (sorry about caps, that's what it came in). I changed the article text to: For this reason, Gormak were considered to be mysterious to off-worlders. This fixes the tense issue and clarifies who holds the opinion without adding another use of "the galaxy". &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) * Gormak in the galaxy: "As the Gormak began constructing space-craft based on scavenged and stolen technology, it is possible that they expanded to planets other than Voss at a later time." Speculation.
 * 5) **Removed. Seemed obvious enough to include it, but then again if it's so obvious it does not need to be included. Also fixed the sourcing tags since that source only appears once after edit. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Image captions: Remember to use periods when writing full sentences.
 * 7) **Darn, thought I had that covered. Made some changes to throw verbs in the captions, making it more obvious they were sentences and safer to add periods all around. Should be fixed. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) * Wikipedia links: No hard rules on this, and this is not a proper objection, but it might not be a bad idea to cut down on these a bit. In the intro, flight could link to starship instead of being an interwiki link.
 * 9) **I originally had that but was concerned that they might not have atmospheric flight too. Did a double link to airspeeders and spacecraft there. Also removed some of the obvious links in the description: hair, fur, nose, claw. No reason why those should be linked when terms like "face" and "eyes" aren't. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Other than that, nice work. Just keep in mind that this article's going to need a ton of care in the months leading up to the release of TOR, and then likely a huge update once it's out. --Imperialles 05:14, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thanks! And thanks for the review! I'm aware that many articles in the project are going to need big work when the game is released, but I'm happy to do that. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Trayus Academy:
 * 13) * I would change the main quote source to the actual HoloNet article instead of ours, so as to be more specific as to where in the HoloNet it came from.
 * 14) **Done! &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Err, not done. My edit didn't actually work as it required an in-house article. Changed back. If you know a way to get a more accurate link without creating an article for each section of the holonet or entry in the holonet, please let me know. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 13:45, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ***I've taken care of it for you. Give it a look so you can see how to do Quoteurl's in the future.
 * 17) **** Okay, that makes sense, but where is the [src] link? Does the "quoteurl" template not give a link for the source? &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 00:57, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ****Nm. I looked up the template and you were just missing the "url=" portion. Added, and thanks for pointing the template out. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 01:00, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) * Slightly reduce some of the details on the Imperial/Republic invasion in the intro. One sentence should do it. It's specifics are somewhat unimportant to the Gormak.
 * 20) **I cut out some details of the Voss and I inserted the Gormak into another clause to make it more relevant to them: When the planet Voss was first discovered not long after the Treaty of Coruscant in 3,653 BBY, the Sith Empire attempted to conquer the planet, which it thought was only populated by Gormak. The Voss revealed themselves and the planet remained independent. Embassies were established by the Empire and the Galactic Republic in an attempt to curry favor with the Voss, angering the Gormak. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) ***Good. I made a slight alteration, but feel free to undo it if you don't like it.
 * 22) * "The Gormak were extremely hostile toward the other natives of the planet Voss, the Voss." - Although I understand what's being said here, others who have not read the original source may be a bit confused if you name the Voss without providing a better distinction between their name and the planet's.
 * 23) **I altered the text in that sentence to: toward the other natives of the planet, the Voss species. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Perfect
 * 25) * The final sentence of "Gormak in the galaxy" is speculation at this point.
 * 26) **Removed, as per Imp's objection. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) *Other than that and Imp's objections, it looks pretty good. Like he said, it'll require a lot of updating, but it seems GA-worthy as it stands. And I'm glad you're taking on projects that you know will need updates, as it's best to get a head-start on them now instead of starting from scratch when a litany of information is released. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 05:48, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) **I'm aware that there's going to be updates and eventually a big flood of new information once the game is released. I'm up for that as long as it's not expected for all articles all at once. :) As you said, the more that's done now, the easier it will be later. Thanks for the review! &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not an objection, but it's generally best practice to put a full-body image in the infobox whenever possible. I noticed there was one such image on the Voss (species) page; might that be used in the infobox? It's possible it won't be good enough quality once it's cropped, but I figured I'd ask. ~ SavageBob 20:05, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry, this is the image I'm talking about, and it seems that it would work in the infobox just fine (except for the right-orientation, but you can't win 'em all!). ~ SavageBob 20:06, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sounds good to me. I'll just swap those images so that there's no double images between the Gormak and Voss (species) articles. Thanks! &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 20:12, May 7, 2010 (UTC)

Pzob

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 16:25, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Warming up for Gamorr.

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Support
 * 1) I fixed two instances of "eachother"; there is a space between the two words. Nice and clean otherwise.  NAYAYEN : TALK 12:52, May 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Comments

Voss (species)

 * Nominated by: &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 18:53, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: There is currently no information on Voss appearance, so there is no 'Biology and appearance' section at this time. This article is one I plan to continuously maintain as new information is released regarding Star Wars: The Old Republic. Looking forward to addressing your objections!

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Support
 * 1) Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 23:25, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:03, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice. --Eyrezer 09:01, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:03, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Not sure here, but I don't think category links should be used in abscence of actual articles. At least, I haven't seen any other FAs/GAs that do.
 * 3) **I have removed them. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 22:29, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) * Not sure if there is a need for Voss in the Galaxy. According to WP:LG, the section tends to be used for discussion of notable individuals, and we know of none. Everything you have in their has already been stated, once, if not more, times elsewhere in the article.
 * 5) **Removed. Just trying to stay as true as possible to the guideline. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 22:29, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***The LG is simply, as you said, a guideline. It even says specifically that X in the galaxy can be removed if there is not sufficient info. Don't be afraid to just take it out if it feels unneeded. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:03, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * In history, there are a few details missing. First, you need to mention that its discovery was accidental. Second, your version of events regarding the Republic and Sith interests in Voss differ slightly. In the intro, you say that the Sith attempted to conquer Voss and the Republic "intervened", while in the history, you say they both plotted, and the Voss intervened. It could use a bit of clarification.
 * 8) **Well, the Republic's "intervention" was still an occupation that the Voss viewed as a plot against them. Source text: When the Sith Empire schemed to conquer Voss, the Republic sought to defend the planet--but the Mystics foresaw both plots and in the end a fleet disappeared, an Empire was humbled and two mighty powers came to Voss peacefully to win favor. I have expanded the history section and clarified the intro to stay closer to the source text in meaning. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 22:29, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) * Also, do we know what form this "intervention" took (military, economic etc.)?
 * 10) **Considering the context of the source text, I think it's fairly obvious that the "missing fleet" was a Republic fleet, but it's unconfirmed. I think it's clear that it was military, because it's failure led to "coming to Voss peacefully", by establishing the embassies. In the revised text it's general "occupation forces" for both sides. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 22:29, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) * In the intro, it sounds like the Republic intervened to help the Voss or simply to defeat the Sith. Clarify their true motive please.
 * 12) **"Occupation force" as per above. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 22:29, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) *Nice work. Your writing continues to improve. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:05, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thanks. Definitely a different style than what I'm used to writing. And thanks for the review! &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 22:29, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) I think you should create an article for the war between the Voss and Gomak.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:48, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) *I have created Eternal War of Voss and linked to it from both the Gormak and Voss (species) articles. I will also link to it from other related articles. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 02:34, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Hardcase

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 02:33, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Continuation of The Deserter clone troopers

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Support
 * 1) Objections addressed via IRC. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:06, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:17, May 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Lee attacks
 * 2) * the Republic group spotted a crashed ship: Smuggler, Cis, Republic ?
 * 3) **Addressed
 * 4) * while he, Cody, and Crys stayed behind to go through the remains of the crashed ship: I don't thinks that only Cody, Crys and Kenobi stayed behind.
 * 5) **They did; they stayed behind to salvage the remains of the ship to find clues. They weren't part of Rex's team, too.
 * 6) ***I mean that not only Cody, Crys and Kenobi stayed behind.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:59, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Lee, in the episode Obi-Wan, Cody, and Crys were the only ones that stayed behind. I've said this before.
 * 8) *****Eh, no. There were a lot of troopers with Kenobi and Cody.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:11, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ******Again, I have no reason to change this, Lee. In the episode, those were the only ones mentioned that stayed behind. Anything else would be redundant, and not even worth mentioning. This article is about Hardcase, not the episode summary in general nor "Kenobi's group that stayed behind."
 * 10) *******Well it is not precise, but OK.
 * 11) * The last paragraph is a little bit to much about Jesse.
 * 12) **Reworded a few things. Hardcase was with Jesse during that time.
 * 13) *That's all from me. Nice to see more TCW (and especially) clones from you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 07:47, May 8, 2010 (UTC)

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Battle droid commander (Dorin)

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 01:25, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Roger Roger.

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 * 1) In the Characteristics section, you say "The droid's actions were devastating enough to please Grievous, who was known to greatly dislike the droids under his command." However, in the second clause, you need to identify where Grievous showed this, and source it. Also, can you find a different word to replace "devastating"? It doesn't work there.  JangFett  (Talk) 03:08, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Meh, the whole paragraph was little... weird. Removed. Kreivi Wolter 09:03, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) I'm seeing major issues with poor wording/phrasing and overall coherency in the article's writing, some POV issues, and also major sourcing mistakes. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 04:45, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Could you glarify what you mean by major sourcing mistakes? Kreivi Wolter 09:03, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **I mean that the article does not adhere to rules 4 and 10, in that it is inadequately sourced. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 13:18, May 9, 2010 (UTC)

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Sith holocron (Kruskan)

 * Nominated by: Grunny  ( talk ) 09:41, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The result of boredom and the random page button.

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 * 1) Well done.  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 13:26, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) —Tommy  9281 23:11, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:08, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Any reason why the holocron infobox wasn't used? —Tommy  9281 01:20, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Simply because I forgot we had it :P. I was using our only holocron FA as a basis and it uses the Artifact infobox so I went with that. I've changed it to the holocron one. Grunny  ( talk ) 02:43, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **No sweat. —Tommy 9281 23:11, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

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Arden Lyn

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 01:06, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Bleh.

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 * 1) Trayus Academy:
 * 2) *No quotes anywhere?
 * 3) **No. Not unless there's a taunt in Teras Kasi. If there is, I haven't been able to find it.
 * 4) *Contextify First Great Schism in the intro.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) *Provide some kind of time marker/indicator of era in that first paragraph of the intro. As it stands, you go from that information to saying she was awakened 25,000 years later, but we don't know 25,000 after what.
 * 7) **But it's immediately qualified in that sentence, with "Great Jedi Purge."
 * 8) *You use "although" twice in quick succession in the intro. Substitute one.
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) *Can we get a "circa" date for her death in the infobox?
 * 11) **Yep, done.
 * 12) *Same goes for the time marker in the first bio paragraph. It needs some kind of indicator of the era in which this all occurred.
 * 13) **Done.
 * 14) *Contextify the Legions of Lettow and the First Great Schism.
 * 15) **The context is given in subsequent sentences.
 * 16) *The transition between her ascension and her duel with Pina is really awkward. Can you find a better transitioning sentence than "In turn, she was cornered by Jedi Master Awdrysta Pina."?
 * 17) **Fixed.
 * 18) *"Somehow, due to her possession of the Kashi Mer talisman, Lyn survived Pina's attack in a Force trance,[1] possibly due to her study of Palawan techniques,[4]  and her decomposed body was located approximately 25,000 years later at the end of the Great Jedi Purge in the Unknown Regions by Emperor  Palpatine's Jedi hunters, the Inquisitors."&mdash;please break this up. In one very long sentence you cover way to much information for it to be read clearly and concisely.
 * 19) **Split.
 * 20) *"Inquisitors Antinnis Tremayne, Ameesa Darys, and Grand Inquisitor Laddinare Torbin located, alongside her body, the Kashi Mer talisman, and when brought into the proximity of Lyn, she was reawakened, and her body was rejuvenated."&mdash;this sentence can be streamlined or broken up to reduce the comma usage and awkward flow.
 * 21) **Fixed.
 * 22) *Context for chaos. My suggestion would be to change that to the Netherworld of the Force, but it needs something else.
 * 23) **I'm using the exact words of the source there, and it doesn't go into specifics, making this a bit difficult. I've tried something... see if that works.
 * 24) *Link Galactic Empire and Zaarin splinter government somewhere in the bio.
 * 25) **Done.
 * 26) *Can we prose-ify some of those quotes in the BTS? I'm not so worried about the second, but the first definitely needs to be.
 * 27) **Fixed.
 * 28) * Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 05:34, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) **Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 07:30, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

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Halmere

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 01:06, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Fneh.

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Annihilator (Executor-class)

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 04:18, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Can't let Hydro and Tranner take all the Exies.

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 * 1) Get 'em while the getting's good. - Lord Hydronium 04:24, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) One more Exy down. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 19:33, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:56, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Lee attacks
 * 2) * Could it be mentioned that the Annihilator was part of the Imperial navy in the bio and in the intro.
 * 3) **Technically, it's never stated as being in the Imperial Navy. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 20:31, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Well, but at least it served the Empire. That should be in the intro and the history section.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:53, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Added to the intro, but I honestly don't think it's necessary to add it to the History section. The Description already mentions its service under the Empire. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 18:48, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *Otherwise great work on the Exie.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:02, May 10, 2010 (UTC)

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Lunker

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:25, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A Gungan....

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 * 1) -- 1358  (Talk) 18:49, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Before I read through it thoroughly: You don't mention Cad Bane in the bio, still you mention a Duros. This is somewhat confusing. --  1358  (Talk) 12:50, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Facepalm. Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:56, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Xd of Xd1358
 * 4) * Split up the first sentence of the intro.
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) * Is Sidious worth a mention in the intro?
 * 7) **Context.
 * 8) *** Then could you possibly merge the context sentence with the previous one? Something like "...from abduction by the Duros bounty hunter Cad Bane, who had been ordered to capture Force-sensitive children by the Sith Lord Darth Sidious." -- 1358  (Talk) 18:36, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Jep.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:39, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) * "Typho reported to the Jedi that Page's family had been notified and introduced them to Lunker." So, did they introduce Page's family to Lunker?
 * 11) **Fixed.
 * 12) * "Lunker brought Tano to Jan-gwa city, where the two Jedi set a trap for Bane." Sounds like Lunker is one of the Jedi who organized the trap. Please reword.
 * 13) **Fixed.
 * 14) * "Skywalker and Tano were able to save Page from Bane's attempt to abduct her, capturing the bounty hunter." Right now it sounds like that Bane was captured because the Jedi managed to save the child, while it should clarify that he was captured with the trap.
 * 15) **Fixed.
 * 16) *-- 1358  (Talk) 18:08, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:17, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) * One more thing before voting: Ordered is not the same thing as tasked. To task is to give someone a mission while ordering is something one can't decline. Please decide whether Sidious tasked (IMO) or ordered Bane. Otherwise, good read about a obscure Gungan. :P -- 1358  (Talk) 18:41, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **Fixed and thanks.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:46, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) Where's the quote? Kreivi Wolter 19:24, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

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 * Please remember to properly format novel appearances/references: "Star Wars: The Clone Wars novelization," not "Star Wars: The Clone Wars (novel)." I've done this for you, but be sure to do it in the future. -- 1358  (Talk) 11:48, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Betl Oxtroe

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:12, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:Surprisingly overlooked.

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 * 1) Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 01:34, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

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All Terrain Ion Cannon

 * Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:56, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The Monstrosity of all All Terrain monstrosities.

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 * 1) Interesting. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 23:15, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 00:35, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Fascinating path to canonicity --Eyrezer 02:33, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Always nice to see Epic Continues stuff. Thefourdotelipsis 12:38, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:57, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Awesome.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:07, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) You gotta get in to get out.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:15, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

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Dendro

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:19, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Another Jedi killed by Vader&hellip;

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 * 1) Pre-nom reviewed. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 19:06, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Lee attacks...after Order 66. Hm, did I execute that Order?
 * 2) *Possible a mention that his master was a Ovoni in the intro.
 * 3) **Done.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Is "Jedi Master" really needed after his master's name in the infobox ?
 * 5) **This is common practice, from what I've seen.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *The first two sentences of the second paragraph of the bio are a little choppy. Merge please.
 * 7) **You sure? Those are two large sentences.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) * the Sith Lord used the Force to push the Padawan to push him back, forward ?
 * 9) **Fixed.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Did Vader stabbed/beheaded etc. Dendro ?
 * 11) **The comic doesn't specify.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) *Otherwise nice work. Hope you find time for his master. And we had the discussion about the lightsaber colour so I won't object it. Always happy to review your articles.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:07, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks for the review, Lee, happy to receive them. Yes, I am working on Hylon, actually.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:06, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

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Dominion

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:17, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: More Super Star Destroyers.

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Enforcer (Executor-class)

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 04:10, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And even more.

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Allegiance (Super Star Destroyer)

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 04:10, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Sick of them yet?

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