Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Khar Delba


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Khar Delba

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:09, December 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Eh.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:57, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  CC7567  (talk) 20:57, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Yeah.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:04, April 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) —Tommy  9281 23:11, April 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:26, April 17, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 2) * That it was home to Sadow's base is mentioned twice in the intro.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) ***I actually meant that it's in the first sentence too. It seems funny to mention it there, go back to description of the planet and then bring it up again. Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:08, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * Infobox shows the Sith as natives and war behemoths as immigrated which contradicts the description section.
 * 7) **Whoops. Must've put it in the wrong place. Addressed.
 * 8) * Inhabitants seems really short. A brief bit on Sadow and Daragon wouldn't go amiss. Neither would some info on his followers. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:35, March 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **I added what I can.
 * 10) ***I still think it can have a bit more detail. You don't mention the Sith at all, despite them being listed as a native species in the infobox and it needs some context on who the Massassi are. I know it's in history, but touching on when the Sith first took control of the world and how long they were there for would fit in here too. Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:08, March 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) ****Addressed.
 * 12) Attack of the Clone
 * 13) * "his real base was on Khar Shian": link? In the body too, please.
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * "Sadow launched an attack": link?
 * 16) **Created and linked.
 * 17) * "Kressh's lone flagship": does this have an individual article, and if not, can it get one?  CC7567  (talk) 22:30, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) **Addressed.
 * 19) Blacklist:
 * 20) * The intro makes no mention of Khar Delba's affiliations past Sadow's Sith Empire, but the article body does.
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * "In addition, Khar Delba is mentioned in several reference books, including The Essential Atlas in 2009." I would mention the other reference books this sentence alludes to.
 * 23) **Addressed.
 * 24) *That's all. —Tommy 9281 22:52, April 12, 2010 (UTC)

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