Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/T1-LB


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

T1-LB

 * Nominated by: Ajeanette 6 January 2009
 * Nomination Comments Now updated with newest releases. Watch out for spoilers. Ajeanette 20 February 2009

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 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "T1-LB, nicknamed "Elbee" by Jedi Padawan Zayne Carrick, was a one of the LB-series bulk-loading droids in service for the Jedi Academy on the planet Taris." Could you add a date for this?
 * 3) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 4) * "However, Zayne Carrick survived the attack." Presumably, he was targeted then. This needs a bit more context.
 * 5) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 6) * "until his latest function for the Jedi Tower and Academy located on the planet Taris" Bad wording. Also, what was this function?
 * 7) *Addressed. I also mentioned the function earlier in the same paragraph. Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 8) * "At the time of the vision each of their Padawans wore a red suit while navigating by the Force to the camp leading the Masters to conclude that one of their own Padawans would bring about the return of the Sith and endanger the galaxy." Run on sentence here.
 * 9) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 10) * "go between" A little too colloquial.
 * 11) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 12) * "decided that they would strike down their Padawans in response to the vision when he discovered that T1-LB had witnessed the entire scene." This is confusing. T1 witnessed the vision?
 * 13) *Addressed Ajeanette 31 January 2009
 * 14) * "one of the Padawans, who had escaped his Masters after they killed his four classmates and attempted to do the same to him" This wording could be a little better.
 * 15) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 16) * "Last Resort departed for the war front where Mandalorians and Republic forces were bogged down, but as supplies began to run low the fugitives raided a mining colony on the planet Vanquo" This is also a bit of a run on sentence, and should be rewritten.
 * 17) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 18) * "but in order for T1-LB to perform any command his companions often had to employ reverse psychology or references to Lucien Draay" This would go better in P&T, which I see you already have. Perhaps expand on that a bit.
 * 19) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 20) * "Then Camper directed the starship towards Jarael's location" Awkward wording.
 * 21) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 22) * When Jarael reached the droid" Can you rephrase this?
 * 23) *Addressed Ajeanette 08 February 2009
 * 24) *That's it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:10, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) The Cav Man:
 * 26) *The intro could do with information from the latest issue.
 * 27) *An explanation is needed on why the Covenant members chose to kill the Padawans to prevent the rise of the Sith.
 * 28) *Witness to a crime: In the year 3,964 BBY, the five Jedi Masters stationed at the Jedi Academy selected T1-LB to accompany them to Taris's moon in order the set up a portable magnetic shield to safeguard against the constant meteor strikes on the moon's surface while the Masters waited for their Jedi Padawans to navigate through the hailstorm of meteor strikes in order to complete their final test before becoming Jedi Knights. This sentence is very long. Please break it down.
 * 29) *Context is needed on the Mandalorian wars in the section of the same name.
 * 30) *Mandalorian Wars - Due to Jarael's homing beacon; what homing beacon? Who gave it to her? A little context, please, if it is the vital clue to finding her.
 * 31) *A New Beginning - is there an article you can link to when you inform us of Carrick being cleared of all charges?
 * 32) *A little more context on how the two individuals mentioned in the section met their fate would be welcome.
 * 33) *The incident mentioned in the personality section - that T1-LB was fooled on Vanquo into making noises - should be included in the bio in more detail than it already is.
 * 34) *More quotes for section headings would be good, especially the last lines from KotOR 38.
 * 35) *Needs a Features and Functions section. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:49, 3 March 2009 (UTC)

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Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)
 * 1) Cav's objections have remained untouched since they were put up just over a month ago. Additionally, Ajeanette has not edited the Wook since Feb 22, 6 weeks ago. Time to remove. It can be renommed later. --Eyrezer 23:10, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Lord Hydronium 23:11, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:20, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Crush. Kill. Destroy.  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:00, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Unfortunate, because I was looking at this article recently as one that seems clean enough and something that I would review, but idle is idle. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:50, 6 April 2009 (UTC)