Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Lanu Pasiq


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Lanu Pasiq

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 08:07, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Evasive Action.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 23:04, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:46, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:19, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:47, 27 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 05:22, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 06:42, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Attack of the Clone
 * 2) * Any more quotes to be found?
 * 3) **None that are particularly interesting. It's usually just "Lanu, check this" or something. She doesn't speak much either.
 * 4) * "Their binders, and Vader moved to engage the entire group at once in combat." Please check this sentence.
 * 5) **Whoops. Fixed.
 * 6) * "and that he had a fellow Jedi fugitive in Zonder": needs a bit of rewording; "had" should be replaced with something more specific and less awkward.
 * 7) **Tweaked.
 * 8) * "Tremayne attempted to capture Sonta at the apartment of the Omwati couple, but he failed the in the process": please check. Also, "he failed in the process" is rather awkward wording; it's either he failed or didn't, but not "in the process".
 * 9) **Fixed.
 * 10) * "Ekria and Sonta, whose name had been identified as a cover for his true identity, Drake Lo'gaan, chose that moment to escape aboard a airspeeder." Please check this again. It's unclear whose name was identified (was it Sonta); also, do you mean "Ekria, Sonta, and Lo'gaan"?
 * 11) **Shifted the exposition totally.
 * 12) * "The chase was joined by three V-wing starfighters": bit awkward wording.
 * 13) **Tweaked.
 * 14) *Looks good.  CC7567  (talk) 19:54, 9 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) **Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 22:31, 9 May 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm a little worried that the bio section might be a bit too much about Tremayne instead of Pasiq. —Xwing328 (Talk) 05:22, 29 May 2009 (UTC)