Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Monjai


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1) Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 17:24, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) And the DarkStryder takeover of Wookieepedia continues :)  Aqua  Unasi  19:00, 16 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Ozzel 17:22, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 18:10, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Enjoy your GA. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:12, 15 August 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The use of "Unfortunately" near the end of the first paragraph in the Bio is kinda POVish. Might want to reword it to "Unfortunately for Monjai", or something else. -- Ozzel 06:44, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Changed to "Despite their efforts" since it refers more to the New Republic as a whole rather than Monjai personally. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 08:08, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 4) * "and installed Imperial prefects over the top of them" Reword/clarify.
 * 5) **Added some context.
 * 6) * "However, Monjai was not immune to displaying emotion, as evidenced when she greeted the returning crew of the FarStar after their months-long mission." This doesn't fit well right there. There should be a better transition here, please.
 * 7) **Slightly rewritten and clarified. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 08:39, 15 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:16, 14 August 2008 (UTC)

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