Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Green Leader (clone trooper)


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Green Leader (clone trooper)

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  Talk 18:09, 29 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yet, another clone article. :)

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:47, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  15:55, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:24, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Gmalek 12:31, 31 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 12:28, September 7, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Lee takes over
 * 2) * participated in a Separatist attack sounds a liitle bit like that he was a Separatist. Reword to make it clearer
 * 3) * Add the 41st Elite Legion and Green Company to Affiliation in the infobox.
 * 4) **All addressed. Thanks, Lee.
 * 5) ***Anytime, Jang.
 * 6) *Otherwise a nice little clone. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:07, 29 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Just one: Is there any way you could add some more info to the P&t? Perhaps from his dialogue you could acsertain that he was concerned for the Jedi, or his fellow clones, or maybe he was worried about their mission's success, etc.? Also, watch for factual accuracy: you said that Gunray was put on the Tranquility "for confinement by Jedi Master Luminara Unduli and Padawan Ahsoka Tano". However, he was to be transported to Coruscant to be put on trial for war crimes, not just confined in the Tranquility. I fixed this myself, but be careful of this in the future.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:56, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *I fixed the P&T and I should have spotted that error with Gunray. Thanks, Jonny. :)
 * 9) **No problem. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:24, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Mauser:
 * 11) * The Episode irself is not the source for him being the member of the 41st Elite.
 * 12) **Addressed
 * 13) ***It's still in the bio.
 * 14) * Do not link to redirect. Hangar bay was one example, not sure if there are others.
 * 15) **This actually falls under However, I should have taken care of that. No they're no other redirects. "Bridge" was one, but I corrected it myself before nomination.
 * 16) ***Just reminding you ;)
 * 17) *Infobox says he was born on Kamino, should be in the body as well.
 * 18) **As per other clone articles that I have done, mentioning Kamino is redundant in the body and intro.
 * 19) ***Errm, no. If the information is in the infobox, it should be in the body as well. Ideally in the intro too.
 * 20) * "sent Dark Acolyte Asajj Ventress to rescue the viceroy"... or silence him ;) Mayble you could reflect that somehow?
 * 21) **Would be irrelevant to mention more of Gunray.
 * 22) * "On the bridge of the Tranquility, the captain of the cruiser alerted everyone nearby that Droch-class boarding ships were approaching." - that part begins to abruptly. Maybe you should say that the plan was for the assassin to infiltrate the cruiser and the boarding ships served as a distraction. Also, you should say something like: "As the boarding ships approached the Tranquility, the captain spotted them and alerted blah-blah-blah".
 * 23) **Well their is no evidence that the boarding ships were used as an distraction. They were used as transports to breach through the Star Destroyer, which is explained. For the second part, I don't see how it begins abruptly. In the episode, that scene was brief, as it showed the approaching podhunters after the captain said "They've brought boarding ships."
 * 24) ***Fixed it myself.
 * 25) * You say that he was the leader of the Green company, but then say that "Green Leader and his squad"... Clarify that. Hint: per the Guide to the Grand Army of the Republic company is 144 troopers led by a captain, while squad is 9 troopers led a sergeant.
 * 26) **Opps. Addressed.
 * 27) *I think that is it for now.  Mauser  Comlink 19:36, 30 August 2009 (UTC)

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