Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Galney (Lady)


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Galney (Lady)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 03:04, 28 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Now we have TWO Galney noms! BWAHAHAHAHA!

(3 AC/2 users/5 total)
Support
 * 1) DC 02:25, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) You sure like to use commas a lot. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 10:04, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:01, 3 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) -  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 21:42, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Good work! Qui-Gon Reborn 04:36, 21 November 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) DC
 * 2) * Mention in the info that Galney gave the info to her consort unknowingly.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Mention Ducha Galney in the intro as well, and give context to her.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Young Chume'da is POVish. Use other words to describe Allana.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * Why did Galney burst out in anger to the GA providing a defense fleet?
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * I believe you could add a few more things to the P&T.
 * 11) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:20, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Good article. DC 02:08, 29 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) Hammertime:
 * 14) * However, it was revealed that Galney had nothing to do with the assassination attempt, but had unknowingly given inside information to a consort who was a trator to the throne. We've already discussed this "a consort". Who was he/she the consort of? I let you slide on the article creaton for this individual on the Ducha nom, but I'm cracking the whip now.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) * Also, that sentence could be slightly reworded to read a little better.
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) * Eliminate underlinking. Make sure things are linked once in the intro, and once upon first mention in the body.
 * 19) **Addressed.
 * 20) * Per Soresu up there. You sure do enjoy the use of commas. See if you can't substitute a few semicolons, or reword or split several sentences so that they aren't so long. If you need clarification/assistance, summon me to IRC.
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * ...Led by Galney's older sister, the Ducha of Terephon. What's Terephon? Only a single word of context is necessary.
 * 23) **Addressed.
 * 24) * You and I have also discussed quote formatting for two-person, single-line apiece exchanges. Please rectify.
 * 25) **Addressed.
 * 26) * I know his significance is probably minor at best, but who is Sergeant Darb? You inroduce him as though we already know who dude is. Was he a Hapan Sergeant? A crewman on the Anakin Solo? Please add a note of context there.
 * 27) **Addressed.
 * 28) * Soon after, the Battle of Hapes broke out. Soon after what? The prom? Christmas? Some context please ;)
 * 29) **Heh. Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 18:19, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) *Good job, though Ducha Galney was more fun. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 14:11, 2 November 2008 (UTC)


 * 1) From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
 * 2) * Context is need on the original assassination attempt on Tenel Ka in both the intro and bio.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Context on why a GA defense fleet was being assembled is needed - are they being devoted to the defense of the Hapan crown? - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 09:21, 11 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 01:06, 14 November 2008 (UTC)

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