Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Thirsty Bantha


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Thirsty Bantha

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 07:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Eh. --Imperialles 07:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)

(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) After a short IRC review. -- 1358  (Talk) 08:08, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 02:25, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) We should consider creating WookieeProject: Drinking establishments. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Good read.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:24, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:10, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 18:23, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Per Faerlstendoiro, definately --Jinzler 23:57, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 16:22, May 19, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Duchess looks it over
 * 2) * When you say in the into, "lest something bad happen to Thirsty Bantha", what do you mean by that? What bad thing precisely was going to happen? Also, the entire article isn't sourced at all. In the "History" section, 4th paragragh, you say that "who demanded to be served mass amounts of drinks", did you mean "massive amounts of drinks"? Duchess Jade  Republic Emblem.svg (Completely Coruscanti) 23:27, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **The article only has one source, so does not need to be sourced. --Eyrezer 02:25, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Per Eyrezer. The game does not specify what bad thing would happen. The usage of mass is perfectly acceptable. --Imperialles 06:59, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Ah, I didn't know about that particular sourcing rule. Other than that, great job. Duchess Jade  Republic Emblem.svg (Completely Coruscanti) 18:13, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Farlstendoiro in the Star Wars, Star Wars Cantiiiina
 * 7) * "A fifteen day deadline" or "a fifteen-day deadline"?
 * 8) * Underlinking: Credits, Gamorrean, maybe "helper droid" if it is some kind of specific technology.
 * 9) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:54, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fifteen-day indeed. Credits is linked to once in the intro, once in the body. Linked to Gamorrean. Helper droid is not a specific technology. --Imperialles 08:04, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) Cylka:
 * 12) * fifteen-day deadline to cough up the money - Cough up is a bit colloquial.
 * 13) * Luckily for Robb - Luckily is a bit POV. If he was the one who thought himself lucky, then add that in.
 * 14) * In the Description section, you introduce Nia Adea and the reader isn't sure who she is. It might be better to avoid mentioning her in that section.
 * 15) * Unfortunately for Robb - Same thing, unfortunately is a bit POV.
 * 16) * I think that a little context for Wunda should be included. I'm assuming that he was the local crimelord, since the Hutts usually were. If I'm correct, that would be good to include, just to show that he was important.
 * 17) * After spending the entire day in the cantina, he left without paying. - This sentence regarding Wunda doesn't seem to connect the first part of the paragraph to the rest of the paragraph. Would it be possible to connect it to the next sentence by saying something like, Wunda's drinking binge didn't hurt the Thirsty Bantha's finances or something?
 * 18) * In the intro you mention that the Thirsty Bantha operated around the time of the Galactic Empire, that it was named after the bantha, and that Adea was Human, but not in the main body.
 * 19) *Interesting little cantina you picked to write about. Cylka  -talk- 21:29, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **I believe I have addressed your objections. Have a look. --Imperialles 21:42, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) "Customer capacity was increased from two tables to six under her supervision." Under whose supervision? I assume you mean Adea, but as is, there's no context.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:13, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *Nice catch. Fixed. --Imperialles 13:26, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) "It was a relatively small cantina, and the building itself was built in traditional Tatooinian style." Not really an objection, but may be, depending on the answer. Does the source specifically state that it was in traditional Tatooinian style?  Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 06:06, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) *It's based on the fact that all buildings in the game look the same. Reworded, though, how is this? --Imperialles 10:25, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **Good for me. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 18:23, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) **Good for me. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 18:23, May 16, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to strike Cylka's objections (AC only)

 * 1) Objections addressed a couple of weeks ago, and Cylka is on a hiatus of sorts, so no reason to hold up the nom.  Grunny  ( talk ) 00:35, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:36, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 06:03, May 14, 2010 (UTC)