Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 6) Per AgriCorps consensus, nominators are restricted to four nominations on the GAN page at any one time. Once one nomination is removed from the page as either successful or unsuccessful, another can be added.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;two of which must be AgriCorps votes&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 2 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Lock (Eeth Koth)

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:25, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A clone each day keeps the doctor away. One TCW GAN should be on this page

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good work, Lee. -- 1358  (Talk) 15:03, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Well done. I'd like to see more noms of this quality, Lee. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:25, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) A Christian 23:52, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 20:17, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Airdate for Grievous Intrigue? --  1358  (Talk) 10:59, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:04, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) *Just to let you know, this is not a valid objection. It is completely up to the writer whether or not to put things like the airdates or release dates of sources in articles. The only time the realease/airdate would be needed is for articles about the source itself. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 14:47, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Fett
 * 5) * In the intro, you say the the Confederate forces were led by Grievous's Separatist destroyer. Reading this sentence, it sounds like the actual destroyer was leading them. Can you clarify that Grievous was leading the troops, onboard the destroyer?
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) * Is there a way that you can reword this sentence in the bio: "Koth's Venator-class Star Destroyer, with Lock on board, was attacked by..."' It's very similiar to the sentence in the intro.
 * 8) **Changed.
 * 9) ***Removing Lock and changing Venator-class Star Destroyer to just Venator doesn't work. Please reword the sentence.
 * 10) ****Eh we only know he served on the Destroyer under Koth. It's correct.
 * 11) *****Please reword the sentence. It's currently the same as the intro's, only it has a few words missing.
 * 12) ******Ah now. Reworded.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 07:52, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Lock and his troops prepared defensive positions at one of the ship's airlocks in order to repel the enemy forces"" How did they know that the super battle droids were about to enter their ship? It sounds like they knew unexpectedly without someone telling them, and then in the next sentence, the supers attacked.
 * 14) **Better ?
 * 15) ***"Lock and his troops prepared defensive positions at one of the ship's airlocks and shortly after this, B2 super battle droids used an armored docking tube to board the cruiser and poured into the Republic vessel." How did Lock and his men know that the supers were about to board the Star Destroyer? Also, please check your grammar in this sentence.
 * 16) ****We don't know how the knew it.
 * 17) *****You can mention that the Separatist ship was preparing to board Koth's Star Destroyer, and that set up Lock to initiate their defensive positions. You even mentioned they tried to stop the droids from boarding the ship in the P&T, too.
 * 18) ******Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:08, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) *******"After a short exchange of broadside fire, Grievous's destroyer forced Koth's warship into submission, intending to board the Republic vessel." So the destroyer wanted to board the Republic vessel?
 * 20) ********Better ?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:06, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) *********Better, but specifically how did Lock and his men know the battle droids were about to board their Star Destroyer? Were they warned? Did they look out a window in the Destroyer?
 * 22) **********No idea.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:17, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ***********Then, please establish a better transition between these two sentences: "The Separatist troops onboard Grievous' destroyer intended to board the Republic vessel. Lock and his troops had prepared defensive positions at one of the ship's airlocks and, shortly after this, B2 super battle droids used an armored docking tube to board the cruiser and poured into the Republic cruiser." It's rather confusing, as it's rather awkwardly phrased, since they apparently knew the droids were about to board their vessel, without warning or consent.
 * 24) ************Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:31, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) * "Although he and his troops did their best," This is too POV orientated.
 * 26) **Fixed.
 * 27) ***"Although he and his troops did tried to" Try to what?
 * 28) ****Bah.
 * 29) *I'll give it another look after this.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:09, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) **Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:38, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) CC
 * 32) * Source for Koth's rank of general? Yes, we all know he probably was one, but unless it's directly confirmed (and it wasn't in the episode, which is what you reference it to) we don't know for sure.
 * 33) **Removed all instances on Koth being a General.
 * 34) * In the body you say that Lock obeyed Koth's order to escape from the cruiser, while you make no reference to this in the intro. (Is it even confirmed that Lock was able to escape? Yes, this is picky, but just because he received an order doesn't necessarily mean that he managed to execute it.) Please bridge this gap.
 * 35) **Removed unverified info and fixed.
 * 36) * Where was Koth while Lock was battling droids? This is a rather important element that's missing throughout the article.
 * 37) **Added.
 * 38) * "Lock was a loyal clone trooper and obeyed the orders given to him by his Jedi General": this doesn't have any standing, seeing as obeying orders isn't the same as being loyal&mdash;if we are to assume that Lock obeyed Koth's single on-screen order. Please try to reword so that there can be more factual correctness.
 * 39) **Removed that sentence because it had no basis.
 * 40) * "He cared for Koth and warned the Jedi of the enemy commando droids." In its current form, this doesn't have complete factual correctness either. Just because he warned Koth of the commando droids doesn't show that he cared for him. Perhaps saying "He showed visible concern when Koth expressed his intention to engage Grievous separately" or something of the like will help.
 * 41) **Reworded.
 * 42) *Please watch your linking. I have to say that it was quite sporadic.  CC7567  (talk) 03:44, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) **Thank you for your review. Next time I double-check linking.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:04, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) You say in the intro that Lock and his men were overrun, and then Koth contacted him. However, in the bio you state that they were overrun, before going back to say that during the firefight, Koth had contacted Lock. Which was it? Did he contact Lock during the firefight, or afterward? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 17:01, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) *Fixed. Thank you for your review.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 09:29, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Pzob

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 16:25, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Warming up for Gamorr.

(0 ACs/4 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) I fixed two instances of "eachother"; there is a space between the two words. Nice and clean otherwise.  NAYAYEN : TALK 12:52, May 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Just added links to the new locations in the body, hope you don't mind. I'm anxious to read Gamorr! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:52, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:21, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) -- 1358  (Talk) 18:42, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Beautimus TK-299  (Click Here) Imperial_Emblem.svg 10:45, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Probably best to specify which species the atmosphere was breathable to. Otherwise, it could mean Kel Dor breathable. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:01, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Done. --Imperialles 14:08, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Skippy: Oink (Per Moff Ball Four)
 * 5) * Intro: You can give the name of "the sole surviving Imperial soldier", and even link it.
 * 6) * Description: "Apart from the presence of a Galactic Empire base during the Imperial Period,[4] no major galactic power lay claim to Pzob" You said it was a secret base, thus I don't think the Empire really laid claim to Pzob which is more or less public. Maybe you could reword this?
 * 7) * History: I know you won't have all the information, with all those "prior to", but are you sure the events are chronologically ordered? Gamorrean settlement before 18 BBY; Republic discovering the word between 5,000-3,000 BY; last official report before 38 BBY. The settlement sounds more probable after the Republic discovers the planet.
 * 8) * Why did the Gamorreans began attacks against the Imperial base? If it was for no apparent reason, that would be worth mentioning.
 * 9) * History, 4th paragraph: Please tell the end of the story. The Eye probably left Pzob with its prisoners, bound for somewhere. Specify that; as far as we know, the Eye is still in Pzob!
 * 10) * You're gonna be asked to create a link for the Imperial base, and at least write a stub.
 * 11) * Also, link Pzob Forest Battle Yard.
 * 12) * Suggestion: If The Essential Atlas Online Companion lists a "Pzob system" instead of the K749 system, then the K749 system is also known as Pzob system (Similar to J11.9 / Tatoo system; LM0228 / Lamaro system).
 * 13) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:20, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **Most of these should be addressed, take a look. As for the Atlas thing, sure, that makes sense, but I'm not comfortable with assumptions. --Imperialles 14:42, May 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Hardcase

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 02:33, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Continuation of The Deserter clone troopers

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Objections addressed via IRC. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:06, May 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:17, May 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Lee attacks
 * 2) * the Republic group spotted a crashed ship: Smuggler, Cis, Republic ?
 * 3) **Addressed
 * 4) * while he, Cody, and Crys stayed behind to go through the remains of the crashed ship: I don't thinks that only Cody, Crys and Kenobi stayed behind.
 * 5) **They did; they stayed behind to salvage the remains of the ship to find clues. They weren't part of Rex's team, too.
 * 6) ***I mean that not only Cody, Crys and Kenobi stayed behind.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:59, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Lee, in the episode Obi-Wan, Cody, and Crys were the only ones that stayed behind. I've said this before.
 * 8) *****Eh, no. There were a lot of troopers with Kenobi and Cody.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:11, May 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ******Again, I have no reason to change this, Lee. In the episode, those were the only ones mentioned that stayed behind. Anything else would be redundant, and not even worth mentioning. This article is about Hardcase, not the episode summary in general nor "Kenobi's group that stayed behind."
 * 10) *******Well it is not precise, but OK.
 * 11) * The last paragraph is a little bit to much about Jesse.
 * 12) **Reworded a few things. Hardcase was with Jesse during that time.
 * 13) *That's all from me. Nice to see more TCW (and especially) clones from you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 07:47, May 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Halmere

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 01:06, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Fneh.

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nothing to object. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:53, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Watch your linking, or I'll bite you on the arm.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:19, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) -- 1358  (Talk) 05:08, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:24, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) "Interrogation of Canna Omonda:" "...and was given an escort of three Imperial Star Destroyers for her journey." Imperial SD currently redirects to Imperial I-class Star Destroyer. If it isn't known what type of SDs these were, please link just to Star Destroyer. --  1358  (Talk) 18:40, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Actually, it links to the more general article for Imperial-class Star Destroyer. Which happens to be a stub, but it's an article all the same. I've pipelinked it to avoid linking to a redirect, however. Thefourdotelipsis 23:22, May 16, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Lunker

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:25, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A Gungan....

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- 1358  (Talk) 18:49, May 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Before I read through it thoroughly: You don't mention Cad Bane in the bio, still you mention a Duros. This is somewhat confusing. --  1358  (Talk) 12:50, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Facepalm. Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:56, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Xd of Xd1358
 * 4) * Split up the first sentence of the intro.
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) * Is Sidious worth a mention in the intro?
 * 7) **Context.
 * 8) *** Then could you possibly merge the context sentence with the previous one? Something like "...from abduction by the Duros bounty hunter Cad Bane, who had been ordered to capture Force-sensitive children by the Sith Lord Darth Sidious." -- 1358  (Talk) 18:36, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Jep.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:39, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) * "Typho reported to the Jedi that Page's family had been notified and introduced them to Lunker." So, did they introduce Page's family to Lunker?
 * 11) **Fixed.
 * 12) * "Lunker brought Tano to Jan-gwa city, where the two Jedi set a trap for Bane." Sounds like Lunker is one of the Jedi who organized the trap. Please reword.
 * 13) **Fixed.
 * 14) * "Skywalker and Tano were able to save Page from Bane's attempt to abduct her, capturing the bounty hunter." Right now it sounds like that Bane was captured because the Jedi managed to save the child, while it should clarify that he was captured with the trap.
 * 15) **Fixed.
 * 16) *-- 1358  (Talk) 18:08, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:17, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) * One more thing before voting: Ordered is not the same thing as tasked. To task is to give someone a mission while ordering is something one can't decline. Please decide whether Sidious tasked (IMO) or ordered Bane. Otherwise, good read about a obscure Gungan. :P -- 1358  (Talk) 18:41, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **Fixed and thanks.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:46, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) Where's the quote? Kreivi Wolter 19:24, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) *Facepalm. Asked JMAS.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:41, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) **Lee, you should be able to add a quote in the article yourself.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:47, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 14:50, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Please remember to properly format novel appearances/references: "Star Wars: The Clone Wars novelization," not "Star Wars: The Clone Wars (novel)." I've done this for you, but be sure to do it in the future. -- 1358  (Talk) 11:48, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:41, May 12, 2010 (UTC)

Dengless Rinn

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:21, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Moustache! Moustache!

(0 ACs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object Comments
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) *"An ambitious bureaucrat, Rinn coveted a higher rank, but his superior, Governor Linrec, didn't offer him any promotion." Why wasn't he offered a promotion?
 * 3) **Added as much as OS specifies. Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *"Prefect Rinn hired bounty hunters both to fight the local agents of the Alliance to Restore the Republic, including Pallas Quintell" You mentioned "both," but I only see the Rebel Alliance being mentioned only.
 * 5) **Added. Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *Can you mention early in the bio that he was a Human male?
 * 7) **Better? Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *Also in the bio, please add context to Governor Linrec. You vaguely say that Rinn was his "underling," without mentioning why he was or who Linrec is.
 * 9) **OS doesn't say much more; added as much as I could. Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *You can't find any suitable quotes for the bio and P&T?
 * 11) **None. Unfortunately, that's common with RPG adventures. Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) *"Rinn considered himself a better catch than Raiss, and thought that Linrec was trying to insult him personally." How was he trying to insult him personally? Please clarify.
 * 13) **Better? Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *"He was younger than he looked like," I don't understand what you mean by this. You mean he appeared younger?
 * 15) **Better? Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * JangFett  (Talk) 20:28, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

Yutsen

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 16:40, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first guest nom for WP:TCW in quite a while; done on a whim

(2 ACs/3 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- 1358  (Talk) 16:48, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Fine work, Jonny. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 17:18, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Hooray journalists. Hooray beer. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:11, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:12, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:05, May 16, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Some context on Binks in the bio. --  1358  (Talk) 16:44, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *D'oh! Added; thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 16:46, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Boba Fett and the Assassin Droids

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:55, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Let's rock!

(0 ACs/4 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:49, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Heh.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:26, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Imperialles 11:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Good work. -- 1358  (Talk) 14:55, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *You currently link and reference to the GG6 disambig page. Please specify first and/or second edition. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:32, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:22, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Could you merge the two youmay templates? --  1358  (Talk) 14:58, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) *Like this? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:00, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Xd
 * 7) * In the intro, you say that Boba Fett did not care about the band, however, in the "Organization" section, you state that experts believed that he would not care. Please decide which one is correct.
 * 8) **Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) *That's it. -- 1358  (Talk) 17:19, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) A few things:
 * 11) * Alien is a humanocentric word; might be better to simply use the term "non-Human"
 * 12) **Let's say organic non-Humans to avoid confusion with droids, if you will. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) * Intro: "Boba Fett and the Assassin Droids was an underground musical group named after a famous bounty hunter and an illegal technology" This sentence presumes prior knowledge of both Fett and assassin droids. Reword it to something like "named after the bounty hunter Boba Fett and assassin droids, considered an illegal technology by the Galactic Empire." That way, you also eliminate the ugly links in the bolded part.
 * 14) **Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) * Intro: "in a vain attempt to stop them." Unsuccessful is probably a better word than vain in this context.
 * 16) **Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) * History: "to be too dangerous for broadcasting." Dangerous how? Politically? Clarify.
 * 18) **Changed; this is all the OS specified. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) *--Imperialles 17:30, May 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Blue Wing

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:04, May 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: No clever comment this time. I know, you're all devastated.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Farl here, I'm ready to vote. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:54, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:11, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  JangFett  (Talk) 17:16, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:04, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:18, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy Farlstendoiro
 * 2) * Biography, 1st paragraph, last sentence is unsourced!
 * 3) **Leftover from a previous edit. Gone now.
 * 4) * I get we don't know whether he survived the battle or not. Right?
 * 5) **Nothing reveals his fate.
 * 6) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:47, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) **Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 19:20, May 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Jallar Golin

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 17:43, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Another minor Emperor's Hand.

(1 ACs/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good to have some of these at Hand. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:30, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:08, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farl
 * 2) * Bio, 2nd paragraph: You use the word "shuttle" six times. Couldn't you replace some of them with a synonym or something? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:26, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **I cut it down to three. Thanks for the review. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 15:22, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa:
 * 5) * Just one. As far as I understand it, we typically capitalize "Master" when being referred to as someone's literal Jedi/Sith Master. Is this an appropriate case here? "and shared a slight connection with his master through the Force." Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:57, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **I don't know whether Palpatine was his formal Jedi/Sith Master, the term is never used in the adventure. All it says is "&hellip;he was trained by the Emperor to be a Hand." So Palpatine was his master in the sense that Golin was trained by him in the Force and served him as an operative, but I wouldn't say Palpatine was his "Master" master. So in this case, I think it's appropriate to leave it undercase. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 20:06, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Very well. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:08, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

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Na'daz

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:05, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: 292 words. My first project for WP:NSW

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:00, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) —Tommy  9281 12:18, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Tommy:
 * 2) * A skilled fighter with a lightsaber, Na'daz traveled once to the Mid Rim world Nal Hutta and discovered a young Force-sensitive Twi'lek named Kas'im. The beginning of this sentence, "A skilled fighter with a lightsaber," has nothing to do with the rest of the sentence. Please rework. —Tommy 9281 19:29, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fixed. Thank you for the review.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:22, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) * Also, calling Na'daz "powerful" is POV. Did someone consider him powerful? —Tommy 9281 21:17, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Yes, Kas'im did. Take a look at the head quote. :)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:08, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *** Great doesn't necessarily mean powerful."Great" has many different meanings according to Dictionary.com, and with no further (or explicit) detail given on Na'daz's "greatness", we can't assume the text is referring to power. —Tommy 9281 17:57, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ****OK, removed "powerful".  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:53, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Just at a glance, I see major tense shifting issues in the intro and bio.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 20:35, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) *Please try.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:37, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Looks like one was fixed by Tommy during his copyedit. Please see my edit for exactly what I meant. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 17:46, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Thank you very much, I did.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:53, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Soresu
 * 13) * There's some things in the intro you make no mention of in the bio.
 * 14) **Fixed.
 * 15) * Na'daz traveled once This suggests that he only ever went to Nal Hutta once in his lifetime, which we do not know. Reword a little.
 * 16) **Fixed.
 * 17) * A few things in the P&A could be mentioned in the intro/bio
 * 18) **Fixed.
 * 19) * Kas'im later gave Na'daz's lightsaber to his greatest student, Bane Greatest is POV. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:30, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **Fixed. Thank you.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:22, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) Powers and abilities: "Great" is POV, in this instance Kas'im's. Reword to something like "considered great by his apprentice, Kas'im." --Imperialles 04:32, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *Fixed. Thanks for your review.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 08:02, May 23, 2010 (UTC)

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Gode Takrab

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:21, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The Trade Federation has gone to Farl this time.

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Belo Tusus

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 11:47, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The belated sequel to Nem Bees, I guess. A WTS offshoot!

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 * 1) So the Twi'lek servant was that Twi'lek servant. I got it! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:33, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

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 * How does the quote relate to this article? Kreivi Wolter 11:38, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Bees dies, while Tusus, in a position of power, abandons his homeworld and people as soon as he thinks he might be in danger. Thefourdotelipsis
 * Ehh, on second thought, I removed it. It's sneaky POV, anyway. Thefourdotelipsis 13:04, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

Hogrum Chalk

 * Nominated by: Menkooroo 06:22, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Chalk it up to my love of the IK's.

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 * 1) OK with me.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:15, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Chalk this one up there with you other excellent IK articles.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:57, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 19:19, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Trayus
 * 2) * "When Imperial Knight Azlyn Rae was grievously injured by the Sith Emperor Darth Krayt while battling him on Had Abbadon, she was fitted with life-preserving armor by the mechanic "Bantha" Rawk  on Kiffex before returning to the Imperial capital  of Bastion; after her arrival at the fortress world, Chalk fitted with her new armor." This sentence is a little tough to get through, just out of virtue of length and the numerous indicators of time. You have a "when", a "while", a "was", a "before", and an "after." See if you can streamline it.
 * 3) * My only other thing is that the P&T seems to have several phrases lifted directly from the above quote. If you could, can you find some suitable synonyms to use?
 * 4) *Trayus out. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 06:28, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Good catches. Ch-ch-check it out! Menkooroo 10:24, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

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Douglas III

 * Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:39, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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 * 1) Jackelopes! Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:36, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Clean. Nice work. --Imperialles 12:51, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 18:00, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:51, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Nicely done.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:08, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Hooray for Michael Douglas! Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 16:46, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Belated vote. Great read. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 16:49, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Fixed 2 reference tags in the infobox, everything else looks nice.  TK-299  (Click Here) Imperial_Emblem.svg 11:54, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Just one: Could you list and source the planet's orbital position in the infobox?  Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:13, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done. I've also added the Outer Rim to the infobox's "Region" field in addition to the Centrality while I was at it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:21, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) ** Actually, I have a question about that. The Atlas Online Companion lists the Centrality as the the planet's sector, so shouldn't the Centrality be listed in the infobox's "sector" parameter? Or is the Online Companion mistaken in calling the Centrality a sector? Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:29, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Haha, I'm glad you brought this up, because I was thinking the exact same thing. My original rationale was that every source I've used for this article, except the Online Companion, calls the Centrality a "region," and we currently categorize it as such, but clearly all Atlas material treats it akin to a sector. So yeah, it's probably best to organize it as a sector for our purposes. Change made. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:33, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Farl: Description: Why "Nevertheless"? What's the relation between both sentences? Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:36, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *I think the connection is pretty self-explanatory. On one hand the planet is said to be of little interest to the rest of the galaxy, but at the same time it's famous and notoriously known for its hostile wildlife. I feel "nevertheless" is used appropriately. If you have another suggestion, please lay it on me. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:31, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) "While the jackelope ultimately made it back for his collection, Douglas himself did not." I don't understand this sentence. Are you saying that he killed it, and sent it back, but didn't return himself?  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:17, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *Unfortunately, the source doesn't elaborate in any more specific terms than that. The original sentence only reads, "The jackelope made it back for his collection, although Mendel himself did not." I tried to avoid coming to any conclusion that isn't spelled out for us exactly, which unfortunately required me to stay pretty close to the original wording. Douglas may have died, he may have shipped his catch back, who knows. I agree it's a bit confusing, but that's what it says. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:31, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) You need to either change the "had been" to "was," or say by when it had been made famous, because using "had been" changes the tense to past perfect, which has to be used in relation to another event/time: "Far from the Galactic Core and of little interest to the rest of the galaxy, Douglas III had been made famous by the game hunter Mendel Douglas&hellip;" Otherwise, good work as usual.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 03:03, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Heh, sure. Fixed. Thanks for the review. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:58, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

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Nevoota (species)

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 08:45, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Don't get stung

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 * 1) Tick, tick? Is that the buzz of the Nevoota bee? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:15, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) I've been wondering when someone was going to cover this joke. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 22:43, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:53, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) I find the subject matter apollen. Yeah, I went there. --Imperialles 03:30, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) This article has a lot of buzz. (Oh man, this needs to pass already to stop the puns.) ~ SavageBob 07:03, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Farl
 * 2) * As there are no individual sections, I understand the main description doubles as the intro. Redlinks are not allowed in the intro.
 * 3) * BtS: You assume the reader is familiar with Veitch, Handley and Beidler. You might give context for them ("Veitch, writer of several Star Wars comic books")
 * 4) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:53, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Tick, tick. --Eyrezer 09:46, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) In the body you say Nevoota is in the Balmorra system, while in the Bts you refer to it as the Nevoota system. This is confusing, since it makes it sound like they are two unrelated systems. Could you use one name or the other?  Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 16:55, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) *I added an explanation. --Eyrezer 22:38, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 9) * I'd prefer to see the BTS chronologically organized. In other words, Veitch makes the joke, people reference it (including Wallace), and Peña canonizes them as a species. The organization now is currently almost reverse chronological. This is just my preference, though, so this isn't an objection per se.
 * 10) * Is there a buzzing in the background of A New Hope? I've never noticed. Can you add a few words to the article to address this (not explaining why the buzz is there, but simply noting whether there is or isn't a buzz?)?
 * 11) *I made a few tweaks for flow; feel free to revert if you prefer. Nice article! And nice to see another BTS-heavy entry! ~ SavageBob 16:45, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) **Explained the buzzing. I'd prefer to keep the BTS this way. While the order is reverse chronological, it gives priority to canonical information, before moving on to non-canon background. Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 03:55, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) The article for the Balmorra system is currently titled Nevoota system. By simply linking to Balmorra system you are creating a redirect issue. If the system article needs to be moved, do that instead of keeping a redirect link in the article. --Imperialles 02:54, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

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 * I don't know if you want more on the original joke for the Bts, but the page of Mike Beidler's The Star Wars Literature Compendium with his full expansion of the Nevoota Bee joke is still online and available here. jSarek 08:02, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

Nigel VI

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 18:33, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ffffffff

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 * 1) uuuuuuuu Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 06:08, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) cccccccc Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:14, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) kkkkkkkk  JangFett  (Talk) 17:03, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) dddddddd  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 17:22, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ???????? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:16, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Two minor reference formatting things. Firstly, can we use the new Atlas Online Companion template SavageBob had cooked up? It allows for linking to both our article and the external link. An example of its usage can be seen in reference number two here.
 * 3) * Secondly, I'm assuming each of the references citing "Twin Stars of Kira" is intended to come from "The Package" adventure. Can we use the citation template used in the Appearances for more specific referencing/clarification? Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:29, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) **The SW.com thing appears to have been put in the article already. References changed to be more specific. --Imperialles 01:16, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Nevermind, found the issue with the SW.com template. Fixed. --Imperialles 01:17, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Soresu
 * 7) * Specify whether the 20 hours are measured locally or using Galactic Standard Time. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:54, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **Done. --Imperialles 00:00, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

CT-327

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 00:23, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Been working on this for a while now

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 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:26, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) IRC review FTW! And pipelink meter! :P -- 1358  (Talk) 18:54, May 23, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Lee attacks one of his old projects
 * 2) * Please mention that the droid killed him from behind.
 * 3) **It's fine as it is. I don't want to add too much detail, because will be pbp.
 * 4) * Do we really know that he expressed that nothing occured often. He says that only one time.
 * 5) **Addressed
 * 6) *All from me. Lee over and out.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:10, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) **Thanks for the review.  JangFett  (Talk) 15:20, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

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Imperial Symphony Orchestra

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 16:38, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Dum Dum Dum, Dum-te-Dum, Dum-te-Dum.

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 * 1) Two music bands simultaneously in the GAN page! Hope there's no cacophony now. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:11, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

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Ord Lithone

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 16:58, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Warming up for Ord Mantell (not really)

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 * 1) Per rule 4, it must follow the LG. Regardless of the given information, the article needs to at least have a description, history, and if necessary: a inhabitants and location section. Right now, all I'm seeing is a summarized three paragraph intro.  JangFett  (Talk) 17:13, May 24, 2010 (UTC)