Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Matta Tremayne


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Matta Tremayne

 * Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 22:43, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:"Beat it, I bet she let me she been feenin' since she met me&hellip;"

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:51, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * So, Antinnis must be a descendant of her brother? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:39, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 20:28, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Good job. Clean and worth a read. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:05, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Fantastic work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 21:47, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Nice --Eyrezer 03:47, April 28, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farlstendoiro will remaine here
 * 2) * Can you specify who is Tremayne talking to in the opening quote?
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * "He professed that he no longer needed her help to become a Jedi, and that he would become the greatest that ever lived" Not strictly needed but, could you specify the greatest Jedi? I think the flow would be better.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Antinnis' article begins with a youmay tag mentioning Matta Tremayne and Rhondi Tremaine. I'm not asking you to add a similar one here, only to explain why it is not here. Maybe there's some good reason I missed.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:29, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thanks Skippy for the review. Please advise if anything else is required. —Tommy 9281 18:20, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Toprawa:
 * 11) * Judging from this sentence, I'm thinking it would be appropriate to make mention in the first biography paragraph that Tremayne lived and instructed on Ossus, before dropping mention of it here: "Tremayne's apprentice was regarded by many of the Masters on Ossus"
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * I'm presuming this is intending to mean the Jedi as a whole. Can we clarify this at all? Maybe the Jedi "in general" or the "Jedi Order?": "His anguish turned to hatred for the Jedi"
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * The first mention of a hard date (4400 BBY) in the body of the article doesn't come until the P/T. I think it would be appropriate to specify this date earlier in the bio.
 * 16) **Addressed.
 * 17) * Not an objection, but a reviewing note: You'll see that I tweaked some bits in the referencing to keep a little consistency with other articles. Feel free to air your grievances with me on IRC regarding this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:00, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) **No grievances. I wasn't sure how to properly do that so I thank you for clearing it up for me. Thanks again for the review, Toprawa. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy 9281 04:54, April 26, 2010 (UTC)

Comments


 * Any reason you used that image of a lightsaber? The description identifies it as a Force-sensitive stormtrooper lightsaber, so I'd recommend using another image, though it's not a big deal.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:26, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll take it out. I wanted a general image of a lightsaber and that was the only one I could find, but I guess it is still a stretch. Thanks. —Tommy 9281 00:29, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Just a query, Tommy. In the intro, it says that Nadd "eventually became one of the most influential Dark Lords of the Sith of all time." Isn't "of all time" part POV? Just wondering, I am not saying he wasn't.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:53, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * No, because the statement can be substantiated several times over. —Tommy 9281 19:47, April 27, 2010 (UTC)