Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Sriluur


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Sriluur

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 00:11, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Done on a whim after skimming through Grimorg.

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Excellent work. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 01:15, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice place to visit, but wouldn't wanna live there. ~ SavageBob 16:01, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 02:10, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) -- 1358  (Talk) 14:24, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:39, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Do I vote for this? The Quay ball says: "It is certain." --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:57, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) —Tommy  9281 00:31, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 2) * No mention of the Houk under "Inhabitants"? As colonists to the world, I think something should be said of them here.
 * 3) **They're mentioned, but I can expand their mention quite a bit, if you want. --Imperialles 10:03, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Expanded on them a bit, what do you think? Would more detail be preferable? --Imperialles 12:47, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) * The "Behind the scenes" assumes there is a conflict among sources, but is it possible the capital city changed over time? How does that work with the chronology of these sources?
 * 6) **Pretty much all the RPG sourcebooks are set primarily during the Rebellion era, so the chronology doesn't add up, sadly. --Imperialles 10:03, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ***After carefully examining the sources involved, your "changed over time" idea is quite viable. The whole section has been removed. --Imperialles 10:33, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) * Does the world actually appear or get mentioned in the adventures within Secrets of the Sisar Run, or is it only in background material? If it actually appears, please add the individual adventures to "Appearances". That's just on a quick glance; I'll be back with more when I get a chance to read through thoroughly. Looking forward to it, though! ~ SavageBob 04:25, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **It's in the individual adventures and the background information. Do you want me to add the adventures to Appearances, while keeping the book itself under Sources? --Imperialles 10:03, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) ***Fixed. There were a couple of minor, paragraph-long "story ideas" in the sourcebook as well, but I am unsure whether to add them or not. --Imperialles 12:47, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **** If they have names, I'd go ahead and create articles for these adventure ideas/hooks. I've done this before, as this is the only way to really get around the distinction we make between "Sources" and "Appearances" for these adventure seeds, which other works have referenced and, thus, which have to be considered as having "happened". See "Trouble at Galaxy Ways" for one example of an article on one of these adventure outlines. ~ SavageBob 00:56, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) *****All adventures now accounted for. --Imperialles 13:09, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) IFYLOFD likes him some Weequay:
 * 14) * "The planet had enormous reserves of copper, but this resource went largely untapped by miners." Why not? Clarify.
 * 15) * Context on Xim please.
 * 16) *That's all.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:47, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Added a little context on Xim. None of the sources state why the copper was left untouched, just that it was. --Imperialles 00:58, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) Skippy Farlstendoiro, agent of WP:AS, will have a look at this
 * 19) * Intro: 1st paragraph: Last sentence is related to a natural astrogeographical feature, as the first 2-3 are. It feels weird having it at the end of the paragraph, after talking about economy, history and culture. Could you reorder the information to give all the astrogeography at the beginning of the paragraph?
 * 20) **Done. --Imperialles 12:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) * Intro: "The planet was colonized by a large group of Houk around 282 BBY, which was very unpopular with the Weequay". Do you mean 282 BBY was a very unpopular year with the Weequay? Probably you mean Houks were unpopular. You could reword the sentence to avoid ambiguity.
 * 22) **How's this? --Imperialles 12:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) * Early hist: You say "even" twice in the same sentence. Please reword.
 * 24) **Done. --Imperialles 12:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) * Houk colonization: "Thousands of Houk from the planet Lijuter colonized the planet in 282 BBY." You might want to add that they colonized the planet Sriluur.
 * 26) **Good catch, fixed. --Imperialles 12:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) * Galactic Civil War: Why was the Empire's presence a "political gesture to the Hutts"? What kind of gesture? A good-will joint effort with the Hutts, or a veiled threat?
 * 28) **Clarified. --Imperialles 12:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) * Sriluur's exports and imports are mentioned only in the Box. Could you add this information to the text? (Perhaps when talking about the planet's self-sufficiency.
 * 30) **Okay, how's this? --Imperialles 12:36, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) *Good job! Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:56, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

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