Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Stafuv Rahz


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Five kadams high. Thefourdotelipsis 13:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Why did it have to be lizards? - Lord Hydronium 09:44, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:36, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:28, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 18:28, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Graestan ( Talk ) 00:48, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:31, 23 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The second paragraph in the bio jumps from Vader's dislike for Lizardman to his mission to Kar'a'katok quite suddenly; can some sort of "some time after his appointment" or something be added in between to remedy this? Other than that, an interesting read. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added. Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 4) * Please remember to add "was a male Gektl [in this case]" to the intro. This should be done for all character articles; if I'm mistaken, please advise.
 * 5) **I can't find the rule, if it exists. And there are many precedents of that not being in an article.
 * 6) ***Added it myself.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * "Imbued with vaulting ambition, Rahz effectively sold the freedom of his species for his own gain when offered Emperor Palpatine a way to bypass Hoszh Iszhir's shield in exchange for a commission in the Imperial Military." Ponderous and awkward, please rephrase and/or divide up this sentence.
 * 8) **I think it was the ass end of that article that was unwieldly. It's been exorcised.
 * 9) * If possible, please elaborate on why guerrerite was so valuable.
 * 10) **Not possible, sorry. No information in the source whatsoever, only that it's valuable.
 * 11) * "Rahz, caring naught for his fellow Gektls, traveled to Imperial Center, hoping for an audience with Emperor Palpatine." This is also a bit awkward.
 * 12) **I'd like to get a second opinion on this one. Generally, with these things, I can see where the problem is with my prose, but I'm just not seeing it here.
 * 13) ***After finding said second opinions, I've removed the third comma. Thefourdotelipsis 08:31, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Rahz was assigned to Lord Darth Vader" Any particular reason why you use the simple title of "Lord" instead of "Dark Lord of the Sith"? I fixed the intro one but seeing this in the bio made me wonder.
 * 15) **Well...that's how he's addressed. In many, many sources. It's his title, as much as "Dark Lord of the Sith."
 * 16) ***Resolved via IRC.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:27, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * Frankly I'm flabbergasted that you couldn't work in Luke's famous "Go ahead and cry!" quote. ;-)
 * 18) **Go ahead and cry! :P Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***Go ahead and chop up some onions! :-P ;-) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *TIMMMMMBERRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:03, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 22) * Give the significance of Ampotem Za in the intro.
 * 23) **Added.
 * 24) * "supervision of control over" reads very awkwardly. Please reword.
 * 25) **That would be me not paying attention. ;) Fixed.
 * 26) * Some introduction for Vader in the bio, please.
 * 27) **Added his military title. Thefourdotelipsis 07:45, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * Two of the quotes seem to be doubly italicized. Can you either explain or rectify?
 * 29) **He's yelling in both of them. So, they're italicized in the source, which means they're unitalicized here. Thefourdotelipsis 07:45, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) ***So, you're saying he would be voiced-over by Samuel L. Jackson, then? Graestan ( Talk ) 00:48, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * "in preparation for the rescue attempt that Vader hoped for" – Also a bit awkward.
 * 32) **I've trimmed that a bit, sing out if it still needs fixin'
 * 33) * I added a link to TIE/ln starfighter. If this is incorrect (I don't have the source), please change it.
 * 34) **No, that's right. Thanks. Thefourdotelipsis 07:45, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * Graestan ( Talk ) 23:51, 20 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 18:33, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'd be much obliged if someone could replace the images with the colourized versions from Dark Horse. Thefourdotelipsis 13:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * "Colourized" -- interesting blend of American and real English, there, 4dot. Will you be doing more Aliens in the Empire articles? (I've got dibs on Gog :P ) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Nah, that's it for them, unless Part 3 gives us something interesting. Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)