Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/PS-29-3


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PS-29-3

 * Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi 17:15, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And now, the final JKTCG-exclusive character, to complete one of my ongoing projects.

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Looks good to me.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  19:56, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2)  Imperators II (Talk) 07:58, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice work as always, Hanzo. ~  Savage  BOB sig.png 05:34, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) Menkooroo 04:56, June 9, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) Well I guess if you cant make it better... Darth Needham 21:05, June 9, 2011 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Exiled Jedi
 * 2) * It seems to me that if you have a personality and traits section then you should be able to do a short biography section.
 * 3) *And since you have some sectioning you need to link items once in the intro and once in the rest of the article.
 * 4) *Perhaps more later. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  18:45, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) **Responded to all. Hanzo Hasashi 19:46, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * 6) * Well... I am now confused, you seemed to contradict yourself by saying that "biography sections are not required unless they fall under 200 words" and that "Sans the intro, PS-29-3 is 176 words long". This seems to say that a biography section is needed since the article is below 200 words without it, please explain this for me so I can make my decision. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  03:11, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) **Oops, I meant to say above 200 words. Hanzo Hasashi 03:25, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 8) ***I understand now. Go ahead and remove it. It does seem rather redundant as it is now.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  03:31, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Exactly what I was thinking, thanks for the response. Hanzo Hasashi 03:36, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 10) Darth Needham
 * 11) * could to try to improve P and T? Darth Needham 18:15, June 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * 12) **Could you be a bit more specific in what you feel should be improved?  Imperators II (Talk) 19:12, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
 * 13) ***I would also ask in what way should it be improved? This is the only thing I can think of. Hanzo Hasashi 21:57, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
 * 14) **** I really think that the Personality in Personality and traits is severely lacking.Darth Needham 20:45, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 15) *****I know, since there is almost nothing known about him. What I have is all known info. Hanzo Hasashi 20:48, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 16) Imperators II
 * 17) * Please rephrase the third and fourth sentence of the BTS section so that they don't both start with "His".
 * 18) * In the third sentence of the BTS section you use "also". Considering that his relatively weak statistics could be contrasted with the power boost, I would use "although" or something like that.  Imperators II (Talk) 19:12, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
 * 19) **Responded to both. Hanzo Hasashi 21:57, June 5, 2011 (UTC)

Comments
 * The Scum and Villainy and Masters of the Force cards both seem to show him flying around the Death Star. Is this solid enough proof he fought in the Battle of Yavin, or could it also have been just a drill? Hanzo Hasashi 17:15, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't think that you can assume he fought in the battle.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  18:45, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * Maybe you could still work something from that into the prose?  Imperators II (Talk) 19:12, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
 * Imperators, if you click the links and look at the photos, is that unquestionably the Death Star he is flying across? If so, will add into his article. Hanzo Hasashi 02:52, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, it does look quite similar, but I guess we can't just assume it.  Imperators II (Talk) 07:58, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * With intro, it is currently 247 words, just short of GA quality. As is, I can't think of ways to further increase its word count. Hanzo Hasashi 20:09, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * Now, upon seeing DS-181-3 and DS-181-4's GA's, have gotten rid of one sentence from the intro. Article now 232 words, and not so much borderline GA. Hanzo Hasashi 13:30, June 3, 2011 (UTC)