Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Delrakkin


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1) "...if said images are available." Thefourdotelipsis 13:15, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Interesting...  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 22:36, 21 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 04:30, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 1,032 words. Oh, you're good. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 14:43, 27 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 04:55, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:30, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:01, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:54, 11 May 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Can we get some more explanation on the indertictor project? It's not that clear to me atm what that was all about. --Eyrezer 03:50, 25 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Minor things:
 * 3) * Could you give a little context on what alazhi is?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:06, 29 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) **Done.
 * 5) * I don't know if this sentence is necessary, as you've already mentioned this: "At some stage prior to the Imperial Period, the planet's natives, the Delrakkin, built Delrakkin City."  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:06, 29 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) **I think it's highly relevant to both sections, so I'm not totally sure. Suggestions? Thefourdotelipsis 06:02, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Could you move the "prior to the Imperial Period" part up one section? I feel like you say the same thing four or five times about Delrakkin City throughout the article, and this seems to be the place where it's easiest to remove it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 15:13, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Done. Thefourdotelipsis 23:59, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 10) * "Delrakkin had constantly stormy weather, but apart from that, its climate was very similar to that of Thyferra.". And that is, namely . . .? Even if it's listed that way in the source, please give more detail. FWIW, I don't recall Thyferra having unending rain. That's more like Jabiim, or maybe Haruun Kal, but I don't blame you since it looks to me like that's from the source.
 * 11) **Well, it's apart from the unending rain and the storms and such. Thyferra is what's mentioned in the source, and it's the most relevant because...that's where bacta comes from.
 * 12) * "The battle station was carrying a vast shipment of lethal contaminated bacta," The bit about the bacta doesn't read particularly well. Perhaps something like a "a shipment of poisoned bacta large enough to facilitate the extermination of the whole populace."
 * 13) **Good, yes.
 * 14) * Link to the battle on Delrakkin please.
 * 15) **It's more of a massacre with one person fighting back. So I've linked to Massacre on Delrakkin.
 * 16) * A bit more context on Skeezer please. A couple words would do.
 * 17) **Yeppers.
 * 18) * One last thing: "Stormy" is not a climate. Not ever, unless the source explicitly says that.
 * 19) **I believe it does. It's a kids book. :P But I'll get back to you on that one. Thefourdotelipsis 23:54, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Hmm. I can't find it in the book, if it did exist, but it is a real word. What should I be using instead? Thefourdotelipsis 08:25, 6 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) ****It has nothing to do with stormy not being a word and everything to do with no climatologist ever calling anything a "stormy climate." Given that the planet is similar to Thyferra, I'd go with "tropical". Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:05, 6 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) *****Eh, that feels like OR to me, since it's "like Thyferra, except..." Is there anything that essentially means "Stormy" that I can use? Thefourdotelipsis 08:16, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) ******Again, stormy isn't a climate, according to the general system used by geographers. FWIW, Thyferra is listed as tropical and it's referenced. If you really want to avoid any trace of sounding anything like OR, I suppose you could list it as "similar to Thyferran" under climate. I don't like that-I'd rather see tropical or temperate, but whatever. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:22, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) *******Done the "similar to Thyferran" thing. I really don't want to assume it's the same, since there are different elements to it, as stated in the text. Thefourdotelipsis 23:02, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:41, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) Toprawa's Silver Hammer:
 * 27) * I believe per our quote "policy," the intro quote should be in Quote format, not Dialogue
 * 28) **Done.
 * 29) * In the first paragraph of the intro, you use the word "planet" five times in three sentences, and it becomes a bit obtrusive to read. Please reword to mix it up a little bit. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:17, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) **Tweaked; let me know if it needs more. Thefourdotelipsis 10:02, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Good. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:01, 5 May 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * They're not, in other words. Thefourdotelipsis 13:15, 21 April 2008 (UTC)