Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Nahdar Vebb


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Nahdar Vebb

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 07:04, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Why couldn't they just call him Bant?

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nice to see this guy in better shape.  CC7567  (talk) 03:19, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Kreivi Wolter 04:34, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Very nice.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:53, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:43, October 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:00, October 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:24, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:23, December 2, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Unless the source literally says he fought valiantly, I would suggest removing or rewording this as POV: "Vebb fought valiantly on the front lines of the war"
 * 3) **Although I seem to remember the guide saying something along those lines, I can't be sure. I changed it to "determinedly" for now, as I know it spoke of his determination to bring the Confederacy to justice. But if I'm wrong or if that's still POV, let me know and I'll take it out.
 * 4) ***"Determinedly" is fine. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:24, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * Nowhere in the early part of the biography do you actually introduce the fact that they discovered and entered a large fortress, as you do in the biography. They just sort of go into the gorge, part the fog, and enter some generic set of doors. Please explain this as well as you have in the intro.
 * 6) **Hopefully cleared up now.
 * 7) * The biography itself makes no mention of Vebb dying to allow Fisto to escape, as the P/T does. You should mention this in this bio as well: "the Mon Calamari eventually gave his life so that Fisto could escape the castle." Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:18, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **"As the general turned around and headed to confront the Jedi, Vebb insisted on staying to face the cyborg while his former Master fled." --Other than this, I'm not sure what more needs to be said on the matter. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 04:14, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) ***I tweaked it a bit, but it works. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:24, December 1, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Should the " "Newsreel" only " be changed to "appears in flashback" ?--Kreivi Wolter 13:32, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * He can't appear in a "flashback" if he hasn't already appeared.  CC7567  (talk) 21:47, 11 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Good point.--Kreivi Wolter 04:37, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Well, to appear in a "newsreel," the event would already have to have taken place, just as in a flashback, and the raid on Greivous's lair has to have taken place after Rookies because of his appearance in it anyway so technically hee did "appear" before the "reel" was posted. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:57, 28 August 2009 (UTC)
 * The "newsreel" is OOU and does not necessarily mean that the event already happened, whereas a flashback is IU and would have to mean that the event happened before the flashback. Unless you have a better solution in mind, I can't see the point of continuing discussion over something like this.  CC7567  (talk) 23:05, 28 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Some images which show him in battle (for the Powers & abilites section)?--Kreivi Wolter 18:51, September 24, 2009 (UTC)