Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Aruk Besadii Aora


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Aruk Besadii Aora

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:04, 25 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: the first of several Hutt noms I have planned for the summer.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Required a spell-check, but good Enochf 21:45, 26 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thoroughly interesting.  Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 10:27, 29 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cross medium/author stuff is great.  Thefourdotelipsis 11:56, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) "I'll exercise with you, Dad!"  Graestan ( Talk ) 21:23, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Objections addressed in IRC.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:58, 12 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) I'd like to see the speech bubbles filled in, since they really do detract from the look of it. Other than that, good stuff. - Lord Hydronium 08:35, 14 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 05:10, 15 June 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) '''From the Sith tablet enscribed by Xadún -
 * 2) * Although 'kajidic' is linked, a brief reference to what it actually is could be done with in either the introduction or the main body.
 * 3) **Added an explanation in the main body, but I think it's unnecessary for the intro and would mess up the flow.
 * 4) * Likewise for 'Vigo'.
 * 5) **Same as above.
 * 6) * 'In that year, however, the operation received its first major hiccup.' - unencyclopedaic terminology. please revise.
 * 7) **Changed to "setback."
 * 8) * 'In 5 BBY, Aruk hired a group of well trained Drell pirates to assassinate Jabba on a trip to Tatooine, but the pirates failed to accomplish their goal.' - How did they fail? or is this not mentioned in the source?
 * 9) **Info added.
 * 10) * 'Kibbick allowed Teroenza free reign to administer the facility, never interfering as long as he was given his share of native nala tree frogs.' Mention that these were used for food, as opposed to a general amphibian collecttion, drug use (as in native tribal cultures), etc.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) **Otherwise - Hutts are not my specialty, Ackbar, but i will review your other Hutt FANs with great anticipation. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 13:10, 26 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Excellent. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:48, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) Durga personally slew Jiliac, but in seeking Black Sun's help he had made a grave error." - Could you make just what the error was a little clearer? The next sentence mentions him rising through Black Sun's ranks, and then being killed by the New Republic...that doesn't quite explain why joining Black Sun was an "error." Thefourdotelipsis 10:10, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) *Clarified some. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:05, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * "I am Borga Besadii Diori, cousin of Durga Besadii Tai, son of Aruk the Great, brother of Zavval."&mdash;Borga the Hutt in Agents of Chaos II. This doesn't seem to fit into the established family tree at all. Please address this somewhere in the article. --Borsk Fey'lya  Talk 09:47, 6 June 2008 (UTC)
 * I noticed that myself, and was gonna add something to the BtS, but then I realized that I was probably reading it wrong. It can just as easily mean "I am Borga, cousin of Durga, who is the son of Aruk, who is the brother of Zavval." If that makes sense. It's definitely worded badly, though because my second interpretation fits perfectly with the established family tree (and Luceno isn't one to make glaring errors like that) I think it's probably the correct interpretation. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 10:45, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Gaaaah...can we do something about those empty speech bubbles? They're quite distracting. - Lord Hydronium 04:03, 14 June 2008 (UTC)