Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Raich


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 06:03, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Adamwankenobi 20:31, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 00:26, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Graestan  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( This party's over ) 20:56, 7 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  Talk  23:11, 8 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) I think this article has FA status within its raich. -- Ozzel 03:48, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 7) Logray: "If I didn’t know better, I’d say Cull is on the loose again." :P  Greyman ( Paratus ) 22:30, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:36, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) Imperialles 14:36, 12 September 2007 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Nitpicking time:
 * 2) *Inconsistent use of pronouns, specifically he and it.
 * 3) *Rebirth, paragraph 3: "After eating at least one animal, the Raich was still hungry and caroused his cave, deciding what he should eat next." Is that supposed to be caroused? Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:59, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) **Switched the "it"s with "he"s, and changed caroused to roamed. Cull Tremayne 22:25, 10 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 6) * In the 1st paragraph of 1.1, vary sentence starts more. Three "The Raich"s in a row is not good.
 * 7) *That is all. Good work, Cull, though I hate articles like this one. ;). Bah! Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 03:53, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) **Varied it up a bit. In my defense, I only wrote these ones. :P Cull Tremayne 04:01, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Better. :) Hobbes15 ( Tiger Headquarters ) 23:37, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 10) Two things:
 * 11) * Introduction: Awkward phrasing: "The Raich was a carnivorous creature that resided on the forest moon of Endor. The creature preyed on a variety of animals that inhabited the forests of the moon. The Raich was able to lure animals to itself through the use of a unique mechanism."
 * 12) * Image:Raich Chase2.jpg and Image:Raich Grab2.jpg are pretty much identical. Could you remove one?
 * --Imperialles 13:26, 11 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) *Rewrote intro somewhat to make less awkward. I kind of like the context that the two images give. One shows how large the Raich is compared to an Ewok like Wicket, while the other one shows how strong the Raich is in pushing the trees aside. Are there any pictures on the Raich crisis page that I could perhaps switch it with? I just think that each picture gives a different context. Cull Tremayne 04:01, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) **Oh, those are supposed be trees. --Imperialles 14:36, 12 September 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Is it a coincidence that Raich is spelled sort of like Reich? Probably. Cull Tremayne 06:03, 4 September 2007 (UTC)
 * Some slight repitition of phrases between the intro and the main body. —Xwing328 (Talk) 00:26, 5 September 2007 (UTC)
 * A link to wank might be a nice bonus, but otherwise, fine work! -- Ozzel 03:48, 10 September 2007 (UTC)