Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of Farstine


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Battle of Farstine

 * Nominated by: 501st  dogma ( talk ) 22:37, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:Farstine, the home of Frankenstien

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  18:00, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 19:15, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) Menkooroo (talk) 17:25, August 15, 2012 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Ingolstadt
 * 2) * "The battle was part of the Five Veils Campaign, an Imperial campaign launched against members of the Trade Federation, led by Customs Vizier Marath Vooro, who refused to..." The mention of Marath Vooroo is an apositive withing an apositive, making this a run-on sentence. Break it up. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 05:38, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) **Better? 501st  dogma ( talk ) 13:31, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) Exiled Jedi
 * 5) * Could you make it clearer that Vooro is captured during a battle? -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  17:28, July 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) **Done. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 17:57, July 23, 2012 (UTC)

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