User talk:Andykatib

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Welcome, Andykatib!
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Kaleesh

 * Welcome! And thanks for your edit to the Kaleesh article. While most of what you added is sourced, do you have a reference for the sentence additions you made starting with "Presumably"? That'll help us keep everything verified. Thanks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:50, 9 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Edit: I meant, "Welcome back, MyNz." Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:51, 9 October 2008 (UTC)
 * The Kaleesh article needs a lot of work. For the "Presumably" bit, I just made a conjecture. Given my experience learning history at school, I leart that I must source my work. But given their circusmtances and following the theory of the "enemy of my enemy is my friend", it is logical that the Kaleesh supported the CIS. Thus logically, they were targeted by the Empire resulting in Thrawn bombing their world. Just like the Arabs supporting the Nazis in World War Two and the Jews supporting the Allies. Right now the references is in a mess. Can you help me to fix it. Thanks for welcoming me back. Andykatib 21:57, 9 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Eh, I'll see what I can do about the Kaleesh article, but it's really a good idea to stay away from the conjecture&mdash;that's what we're trying to get rid of&mdash;and stick just to the facts. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:05, 11 October 2008 (UTC)

Second Battle of Bakura
Well, I can tell just at a glance that you've done a considerable amount of work on the article, and tweaking, you could probably get to FA, in the long run. However, there will have to be quite a bit of tweaking. I don't have a lot of time to read it at the moment (although I will do in the next few days,) but there are some things that I can point out for you, for starters. Firstly, all the items in the infobox need to be given a source. Secondly, it would be best to make one section entitled "History," and make all the other sections you have currently subsections of that section. Thirdly, it is important to source every single paragraph, and you don't need to break up citations with a period. Fourthly, you should write a "Behind the scenes" section. Usually, these can be fairly simple. As an example, take a look at the Behind the scenes section on Battle of Otoh Sancture, an article I recently cleaned up. Another important thing: unless you really have to, try not to use characters first names, instead, use their surnames. Lastly, to make things easier for the rest of us, please sign your comments, like the one you left on my talkpage, with four tildes. Get cracking on those points, and you'll be well on your way. Good luck. :) Thefourdotelipsis 12:21, 13 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4Dot has covered all of the major points I wanted to address, but I will add that I think the aftermath section is a little too lengthy, and focuses on events only indirectly related to the battle, such as the Corellian Crisis, and Capitison's family issues. Mention of the second invasion attempt is valid, however, in my opinion. The article would also need a longer introductory paragraph. However, if you are looking for GA status, and constructive criticism and feedback, then I would suggest nominating the article and allowing our regular reviewers and Agricorps members to have a look at it.
 * Thanks guys for your advice. I will implement all of them and thanks for taking the time to help me. Andykatib 17:50, 13 November 2008 Andykatib 17:50, 13 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Good work. I'll take a look at in due course. Thefourdotelipsis 05:59, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Just to echo others, nice job expanding the article, and I'll read over it eventually. Nice to see you back MyNz, wondered what happened to you. Cull Tremayne 06:47, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Second Battle of Bakura

 * If you don't mind, I'm going to move the article to Bakura Incident and do whatever is needed to get it up to FA. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:50, 26 January 2009 (UTC)
 * It is perfectly allright, do whatever is needed to improve that article. I am working on a number of other Wookieepedian projects including sourcing articles and writing the Ssi-ruuvi Imperium page. So far, I have worked on a number of other articles including the Battle of Kashyyyk (Second Imperium Crisis), the Second Imperium Crisis, the Battle of the Jedi Praxeum (Second Imperium Crisis), the Ssi-ruuvi invasions. Please have a read of these articles and tell me what you think about them. I have to admit that I am far too detailed in writing articles. Even at school, teachers say that my essays are far too long and too detailed. Thanks for being my friend. Andykatib 2:03, 27 January 2009 (UTC)