Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Taryn Clancy


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Taryn Clancy

 * Nominated by:  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 01:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: One of Vilardi's Vixens. I'd let her handle my package any day.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) That's two you owe me, Junior.  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:27, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:17, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) DC 22:23, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:04, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Heh&hellip; &hellip; heh&hellip;. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:15, 19 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --Eyrezer 06:42, 9 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 10:35, 14 April 2009 (UTC)

Object SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is the truth ) 10:57, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) A bit of context on Garm Bel Iblis' role in the battle (ie. Commander of defense forces or whatever).
 * 1) *I added it to the intro. The body section kind of already says it.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 11:28, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) DC
 * 3) * Why did Kal finally allow Taryn to accompany him, and why didn't he let her join him in the first place?
 * 4) **The source doesn't say.
 * 5) ***Bah.
 * 6) * Could you mention that the Requital was Imperial before you talk about the Inspection team?
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * You give no context foe Del Sato when you introduce him, leaving me to wonder who the heck he is. DC 19:58, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Contextified.
 * 10) * Any chance you could combine the paragraphs in the Bio? A bunch of short paragraphs doesn't look that great.
 * 11) **I fixed a couple spots where the separation wasn't necessary; as for the others, I kind of tried to follow the "contour" of the story, which involves a fair amount of jumping ahead temporally.
 * 12) ***It looks a lot better, and I understand about where you didn't combine the paragraphs.
 * 13) *Be aware of context, you're missing it in some places, but otherwise great job. DC 19:54, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) You should mention in the Bts that the story was also published on Hyperspace. You could also crop the picture from the title page and add that in if you were so inclined. Otherwise, very neat. You should write more! --Eyrezer 06:39, 2 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Cav's AJ loving eye:
 * 16) * I feel that the political situation on Coruscant should be clarified - you mention the "former Imperial Palace" without noting why this is. You also do not tell us what is now operating out of the palace.
 * 17) **Made a change. Let me know if more info is needed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:04, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * Mention should be made of Voldt searching the cargo hold, and Bremen & Sato setting up the fake boxes to explain why Voldt believed their lie about not setting down on Coruscant, and to give a little background when the homing beacon is discovered - namely that the Imperials were in the cargo hold with the boxes where the beacon was found. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 01:26, 4 April 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * When handling similar, one-source AJ story articles, such as Detien Kaileel, I sourced the RPG bio info separately to the story; imo, it can't be considered part of the story since it's not present in the reprint. I'd suggest you do the same here. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:15, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Excellent point. I'll get to that sometime today. Just let me make sure we agree that calling "Taryn Clancy" (the RPG stats sidebar) a separate article would be dumb.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 13:52, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Yeah. I'd just ref it to the AJ issue itself. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:04, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
 * OK, I think she's fully sourced now.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 19:56, 21 February 2009 (UTC)