Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Imperial Oasis (second nomination)

Imperial Oasis

 * Nominated by: StarsiderSWG 23:49, July 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Second nomination for a good article. Will be willing to fix any problems.

Exiled Jedi

 * At first glance, you need to source the final sentence of the BTS. (I put a fact tag there.) -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  00:08, July 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * At this time I cannot find a source. So I simply removed the sentence StarsiderSWG 00:23, July 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * Source the quote in the behind the scenes section.
 * No, I do not think that is the correct way to source it, you need to provide a webpage or written source, not a company name.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:17, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * The introduction on this article needs to be expanded to better summarize the entire article.
 * Much better.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:17, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * In the BTS you call it an Imperial garrison, but in the behind the scenes you only mention it as a body of water. If there is a body of water known as the Imperial Oasis please mention this in the intro and more clearly in the body of the article.
 * Better, but in the description I believe it would be better to have the information about the lake before the information about the military installation.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:17, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * I would try to use fewer paragraphs in the behind the scenes section and the history section.
 * There seem to be a fair number of linking problems in the article mostly where you forgot to link things. Please look over the article and find things that you might have forgot to link.
 * Perhaps more later.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:59, July 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay, I will fix these and soon as I can, and to the best of my ability. StarsiderSWG 20:40, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * Alright, I believe I've fixed the problems, but I'll still be ready to amend anything else if needed. StarsiderSWG 21:42, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * Mention the 1.5 BBY date in the introduction when you are talking about Colonel Darkstone.
 * Context on Jubai Laetlii, who exactly was this?
 * Better, but a little more description of the species or gender of this person would be good.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  03:40, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
 * It's getting better, but it still needs more work. I'll look it over again in a day or two.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:17, July 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * Made some more updates to it. StarsiderSWG 02:14, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
 * The following sentence is speculative: "Whether or not this painting depicted some sort of battle, real or otherwise, is unclear, but it was titled Imperial Oasis Incident, and was issued out by Navari Trik in Mos Eisley as part of the Galactic Empire painting contest." I would suggest placing the part of the sentence before the "and" in gamemechanics tags, and wording it from the perspective of the spacer that found the painting. Please also reword the remaining part of the sentence that is after the "and". Doing this will split this long sentence into two smaller ones, and remove the speculation.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  03:47, July 20, 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay, changing it a bit now. But out of curiosity, what exactly are "game mechanic" tags? StarsiderSWG 14:48, July 20, 2011 (UTC)