Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Treis Sinde


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Treis Sinde

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 11:26, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: GA, upgrading to FA with the completed release of the "Fight Another Day" story arc. Legacy comic spoilers.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:31, 28 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 15:18, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 02:25, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Lord Hydronium 22:30, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:39, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) There's a lot of sentences starting off with participles (examples: "Infiltrating the Imperious...", "Rescuing the pilots...", "Instructing three of the pilots...", etc.). The sentence structure starts to feel tired, and it could use more variation. - Lord Hydronium 22:57, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Reworked. Tell me what you think. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 08:28, 20 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) A couple of things from Fiolli:
 * 4) * The subsection "Escape from Dac" begins with "To do this&hellip;" Please define "this." It is the start of a new subsection.
 * 5) **Left over from an old revision where there was no sectioning.
 * 6) * There are a lot of offset em dash clauses in the article. I happen to like offset clauses, but there are two places where there are too many in succession or close proximity. They are:
 * 7) **The first paragraph of "A bold plan" (One in each of the first two sentences)
 * 8) ***Second one removed and wording rejigged.
 * 9) ** The first paragraph of "Confronting the Leviathan" (3 total; two in first two sentences)
 * 10) ***I am dash happy. Reworked the first two.
 * 11) *That's all. Nice work, Cav. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:35, 20 April 2009 (UTC)#**Many thanks! -  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 08:28, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

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