Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Yuvernian

Yuvernian

 * Nominated by: Menkooroo 14:57, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A guest nom for WP:AS.

A few things:

 * Intro: Species is preferable to "race." May also want to mention their sentience.
 * Biology and appearance: "measuring 4.8 long" 4.8 what, exactly?
 * More obscure articles, please! --Imperialles 15:13, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Both fixed. Menkooroo 15:30, May 25, 2010 (UTC)

Skippy Farlstendoiro, agent of WP:AS

 * Specify something more about Adiss in the intro. Per In The G., Adiss was... a smuggler?
 * Done. Intro expanded as well.
 * Biology: Are you absolutely sure that all the traits you mention are common to the whole species? Unless the OS specify so, maybe other Yuvernians can have other eye colors, other teeth configuration, other skin pigmentation... If so, reword it so you only say that "at least some individuals" had blue eyes, etc.
 * How's it look now?
 * History: Maybe you could mention who won the Battle of Yuvern, even if Yuvernians themselves weren't really involved AFAIK.
 * Yeah, the relevance is admittedly questionable. There was nothing else for the history section, though. Changed "engaged" to "defeated", anyway.
 * "Although Adiss can be seen in at least two shots". Which shots?
 * Do they have names? Not sure how to elaborate on this one.
 * How is it that Star Wars Chronicles and Who's Who In Jabba's Palace specifically mention Adiss and are not listed as sources?
 * I left them out because they predate Adiss's identification as a Yuvernian --- should they be put in regardless?
 * Sorry to butt in, but if he's pictured, I'd count them as "sources", since they provide visual information about the species. ~ SavageBob 17:15, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Hidalgo's Rookies: Rendezvous is listed as an Appearance. Are you sure nothing can be mentioned about that?
 * Background cameo. Not sure if it's relevant for the bts on the article on Adiss's species --- maybe if it expanded knowledge about the Yuvernians. Let me know if you disagree.
 * Also: Knowing Hidalgo, he probably went into detail about the Yuverian appearing in R:R somewhere in Rookies: Rendezvous Annotations, possibly giving you more BtS info, and a BtS opening quote. Have a look if you please.
 * Thanks for the link! Unfortunately, all he does is confirm that the Yuvernian is Adiss. Made a bts quote from jSarek, though. Menkooroo 16:19, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:14, May 25, 2010 (UTC)

Prepare to be savaged...

 * Just on a quick glance: Can you expand the lead? It should be about twice that length, I'd say.
 * Expanded. Any longer and it's the entire biology and appearance section. :^)
 * Also, you currently source Chronicles information to an Insider article. Is this on purpose? Could Chronicles itself be consulted?
 * Yup, done on purpose. Taken from Adiss's article --- the Insider article mentions Chronicles mistake.
 * Have you looked through The Art of Star Wars Episode VI: Return of the Jedi for any background information?
 * How about Behind the Magic?
 * I'm pretty sure Cande Adiss is mentioned in Inside the Worlds of Star Wars Trilogy (or possibly another Incredible Cross Sections book); it's mentioned that his size required him to use Jabba's personal entrance to get into and out of the palace, if I remember correctly. Even if his species is not mentioned by name, it might have a tidbit of information you can add.
 * It's Complete Locations --- Added a bit about the elevator, also drawing from the databank entry and jSarek's blog.
 * Finally, have you checked the various adaptations of ROTJ for images or mentions of Adiss? That would mean the novelization, the radio play, the Marvel Comics edition, the Special Edition comic, and the manga adaptation. It's a longshot, but he may be pictured. ~ SavageBob 15:15, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * He's in the manga! More to come soon. Menkooroo 16:19, May 25, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

 * I'm new to the whole species nom thing, so veterans, please feel free to rip me apart. Menkooroo 14:57, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Specifically... is that hair? I can't tell for sure and I didn't want to speculate. seem to think it is. Menkooroo 15:10, May 25, 2010 (UTC)