Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Livette


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1)  Drgns007 Sith Lord 03:40, 30 May 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) It's got an expand tag on it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 10:47, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) From Aqua Unasi
 * 3) * Some stuff in the article could use a bit more context and explanation as to who/what it is:
 * 4) ** "She did not want a repeat of Ducha Requud's unfortunate accident." What is this accident? Could you add a quick explanation?
 * 5) **" in case Taryn and Ben ran into problems" Could you un-pipelink Ben here, so people know that it's Ben Skywalker?
 * 6) ** The article seems to be assuming that the reader knows whats happening when it starts talking about "Trista stayed back to protect Livette in case Taryn and Ben run into trouble - What are they doing? Is it possible to explain without messing up the flow of the article?
 * 7) ** You could maybe add that Shedu Maad is a Hapan world, but thats a bit picky I guess :)
 * 8) * Okay, so if you add some of that in, hopefully the article will be a little longer, and then it might be nice if you could divide it into sections like an Introduction, a Biography and maybe a Personality and Traits section?
 * 9) ** I see you divided the article into sections - good. One thing I'd suggest about that is to put some of the stuff about Livette not dealing with normal Hapan vanities and such into the P&T section, instead of the intro.
 * 10) * Cool, good work. The article is much better now. It still could use a little work though.
 * 11) ** I'm not sure if the introduction is really a great overview of the article, now that you added about her gray hair and such in the P&T, you could summarize that part a bit and add about her being suspected of helping th Remenant, or something.
 * 12) *** Its a bit better now.
 * 13) **The prose in the article is a bit choppy, and in some spots, I'm a bit confused as to what is happening. I went through and cleaned it up a bit, but you might want to read through it and see if you think anything could be cleared up a bit.
 * 14) ** Also, with the referencing, I'm not exactly sure what the policy is when there is only one source, but I'm pretty sure that you don't need to have references in the article then, its assumed its all from its one appearance. Right now you just have one part sourced, and it looks kinda weird. :)
 * 15) ** In the infobox, it has "Imperial Remnant?" Is the questionmark necessary? Is she or isn't she? I actually haven't read Invincible yet, so thats a bit confusing to me.
 * 16) * Nice work! :)  Aqua  Unasi  22:20, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) Way too short. Expand, expand, expand. It starts off very suddenly, and is modeled wrong too.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:52, 31 May 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Ok I'll try to do that, but maybe some you help me out.  Drgns007 Sith Lord 14:37, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Thanks Aqua Unasi, I'll do that.  Drgns007 Sith Lord 18:45, 31 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **How's that?  Drgns007 Sith Lord 17:00, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *** Better! I reviewed it again - see my comments above. :)  Aqua  Unasi  18:56, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Ok, what do you mean summarize about her grey hair in the introduction? I thought it was already like that.   Drgns007 Sith Lord 19:13, 1 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *****In the introduction you have who she is and her job, and then you talk about her hair color and the blaster burn and stuff. I was trying to say that you're very specific about that, but not about the events of her life and such, and it's good to have a quick overview of that in your introduction. I guess saying to summarize it wasn't the best wording, since it is already summarized, but I just meant to maybe make the intro more, well-rounded, I guess.  Aqua  Unasi  19:24, 1 June 2008 (UTC)