Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Hurst


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Hurst

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 05:45, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Darth Bane had daddy issues.

(3 ACs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  14:59, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 20:46, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Well done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 02:02, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 22:36, 13 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:24, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:53, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:15, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Council Chambers:
 * 2) * Can you try to vary "drunken rages" a bit? Currently it's used three times.
 * 3) **Varied.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 20:42, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *Otherwise very good. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 20:40, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 6) * Place of death should be in the infobox.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * Hurst's debt should be first mentioned before you state that he died. Otherwise, well done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 13:37, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:15, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) The Grand Master
 * 11) * "In 1,008 BBY, Hurst died of a massive heart attack, and his son would go on to be the Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Bane." The last part of the sentence seems a little out of place. Could it be reworded slightly?
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * You mention a couple of times Hurst's life problems. Could you specify what these are? (If this is meant to refer simply to the gambling and drinking, could you make the connection a little clearer?)
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * At the end of the bio you say that Bane speculated that he killed Hurst with the Force, while in the P&t you say that he did kill him with the Force. Please clear this up.
 * 16) **Addressed.
 * 17) *Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 02:55, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 21:46, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Soresu
 * 20) * Far too many sentences beginm with Hurst and Dessel in the bio. Please vary it a bit.
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * Mention in the intro that his death was caused by Bane. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:39, 16 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:47, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

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