Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Nosaurian


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Nosaurian

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 03:12, October 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's taken a long time to get this one ready, but I think it's time. ~ SavageBob 03:12, October 3, 2009 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:20, October 8, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Another top-quality article. --Eyrezer 23:39, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:04, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 08:03, November 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Though please note my comment --  —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 12:46, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Fantastic referencing. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:08, December 2, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) IFYLOFD:
 * 2) *Watch your linking, please.
 * 3) * "To outsiders, however, they were known to disdain Humans (and, to a lesser extent, other species) for what the reptilians considered a history of mistreatment. " Reword this; parentheses are generally not used in FAs.
 * 4) * Context on Hajial Chase. Is it a city?
 * 5) * "Meanwhile, the Corellians seemed more eager to exploit New Plympto's resources (scant as they were)" Reword without parentheses.
 * 6) * Context on the Yuuzhan Vong.
 * 7) * "Such Nosaurians often faced discrimination from others due to their reputation as troublesome (especially among Humans)" Reword without parentheses.
 * 8) *That's it. I must say, I loved this article. Fantastic work.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:58, October 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **All these should be addressed except linking. Can you specify what you mean? ~ SavageBob 14:36, October 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Skippy Farlstendoiro. Mostly suggestions
 * 11) * Box: Could you use some order for enumerations? Particularly skin color; as there are many options, could you consider alphabetical order, gathering the colors with the same source, or some order used for colors such as rainbow or antyhing?
 * 12) * Intro: The 3rd paragraph could mention, after the first contact with the Corellians and before the rikknit population plummeting, that the economy of New Plympto depended on exporting rikknit.
 * 13) * Intro: 4th paragraph says that Holdfast and Greenbark were both famous. In-universe, Holdfast was a famous journalist and athlete; was Greenbark famous in-universe for his adventures?
 * 14) * Main body: I understand names should be linked once per infobox, per intro and per main body (I was told that once). Have you noticed that Bomo Greenbark is never linked in the main body?
 * 15) * Biology: Could you divide the 3rd paragraph? Just before "A long, beaklike snout". I think you talk about the top of the head and the lower part in detail. Just a suggestion.
 * 16) * Society: "Despite the fact that a new bride and groom might be total strangers at the time of marriage, Nosaurians could form fierce bonds with their mates and their families; the Nosaurian Bomo Greenbark traveled to three different worlds to track down his wife and daughter" Are you suggesting that the Greenbarks did not know each other when they married, or is this information unknown?
 * 17) * History / The Clone Wars: "In 24 BBY, things changed." Doesn't sound encyclopedic at all to me. Could you please reword that? Just suggestion.
 * 18) * History / The Clone Wars: "such as the Battle of New Plympto". Could you give the date of the Battle? I think it's important as it was at the end of the war.
 * 19) * In the galaxy: "his fellow trainee, Cope Shykrill, affected him with a sinister influence, which turned him against his fellow trainees". "His fellow trainee" repeated. Use a synonym, please.
 * 20) * In the galaxy: Last paragraph. I find confusing your use of "For example" in the second example of an enumeration. Could you please reword that?
 * 21) *Great job. It's hard to find things to object; WP:A are starting to think alike. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:36, October 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) **Thanks as always for the detailed review. All of these should be fixed. The infobox orders the "famous members" by clan name. Oh, and we don't know what their economy was like before contact with Corellians; I'd assume it was focused on domestic production much like our Earth is now prior to any alien contacts, but we don't really know from the sources. Otherwise, I've tried to follow your advice! ~ SavageBob 15:30, October 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) You can't get rid of Skippy so easily
 * 24) * One more: Here I can read about New Plympto "officers" doing something. Have a look and decide: Are they are Nosaurians? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:53, October 8, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) **Hmm. There's no time designation, so there's no way to tell. If this is the Imperial period, "New Plympto officials" would most likely be Humans from the Empire, for example. In other words, I think this information is germane to New Plympto, but not to Nosaurian. ~ SavageBob 14:19, October 8, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) Harrar
 * 27) * It's a simple fix but I don't want to misinterpret source info. Remember that in 28 ABY the New Republic transitions into the Galactic Federation of Free Alliances; yet in the New Republic period section you continue to refer to the govt as the New Republic. Chronological info coming after 28 ABY and the Battle of Ebaq 9 should refer to the New Republic as the Galactic Federation of Free Alliances, methinks :P. Great article otherwise. -- —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 22:12, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) **Ah, good catch. Is it OK now? ~ SavageBob 16:13, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Yep that's all good! -- —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 12:46, December 1, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Regarding the Wizards article Skippy found, I'd suggest adding it to the sources along with the Pos template. Perhaps a note at the end of the BTS explaining the possible appearance could accompany this. --Eyrezer 23:39, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * If possible Bob, I'd like to see the comic book quotations sourced to their individual issues. -- —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 12:46, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * OK, I'll see about tracking them down and changing the source notations. Thanks again for your review. ~ SavageBob 16:26, December 1, 2009 (UTC)