Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Boil


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Boil

 * Nominated by: QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:54, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: More clones.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- Xd1358  Talk 13:41, December 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) (I now have 50 edits main)Sean Red 15:13, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * --Crumb 19:31, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 18:38, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:05, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 02:57, January 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Boil and Waxer: An ambiguously gay clone duo. —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 14:40, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) One of the few clone articles worth reading. Nice work. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 15:28, January 25, 2010 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Passing stuff
 * 2) * Have you checked all sources, including Ultimate Battles (specifically for new info) as well as The Battle for Ryloth and all other possible young reader books for information and appearances?
 * 3) **See above.
 * 4) ***Addressed. Thanks to Jang for the info. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:05, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * The episode isn't a source for the dates in the article.  CC7567  (talk) 20:12, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Addressed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:23, September 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Needs update for Landing at Point Rain, like Waxer. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:34, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *Addressed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 11:32, November 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Attack of the Clone
 * 10) * Why did Waxer and Boil remove their helmets?
 * 11) **Fixed.
 * 12) * Can you get his jibe about the "tail-heads" in somewhere? I'm sure it's relevant somehow.
 * 13) **Do you mean the biography, because there is already a sentence about it in the P&T?
 * 14) ***I was referring more to the P&T, as it doesn't specifically mention the discriminatory "tail-head" reference. (That's what I was getting after; it didn't sound like he was joking when he said that.) If it's appropriate, you can add it to the bio as well, but if not, then the P&T is fine.  CC7567  (talk) 18:34, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ****Addressed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:49, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Please watch both your linking and your grammar. I've fixed all of the issues I caught, but they do tend to add up.  CC7567  (talk) 04:33, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Umm, yeah. I guess I wasn't paying much attention to Boil, since he was mostly written by me as a tie-in to Waxer. I'll try to be more careful in the future. Thanks for your copyedit and the review. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 12:50, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) Pasta! Pas-tah!
 * 19) * "As Kenobi and Cody instructed their men&hellip;" This sentence reads awkwardly with the em dash clause in there. Please consolidate the clause into the main sentence and split it into two.
 * 20) **Addressed.
 * 21) * In the P&T, many sentences about Boil are sold as always happening rather than happening in what we know. For example, did he always have the propensity to use sarcasm? Was he always by the book? Please tweak these wordings. Later in the paragraph it is stated that "When he and Waxer were late from their scouting mission, Kenobi noted that these unpunctual actions were not like them." This is excellent and how it should be written earlier, because it states that someone noticed it at a specific time rather than being passed off as always being that way.
 * 22) **Tweaked.
 * 23) * In the P&T, also, the word "care" is used frequently. The one that seems the most awkward is referring to Waxer.
 * 24) **Not sure about frequently, as it was used only twice. Anyway, I got rid of the one referring to Waxer.
 * 25) * "On Ryloth, Boil wore Phase I clone trooper armor&hellip;" This is sourced to a TCW episode. What in the episode actually states that it is this type of armor or was this inferred by sight?
 * 26) **Yes, it was inferred by sight. Come to think of it, however, it does look kinda different from the traditional Phase I armor. So, yeah, fixed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 14:38, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) *&mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:08, January 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) My biggest concern with this is that there are quite a few instances throughout where "Waxer and Boil" is used. Because this is supposed to be about Boil, you need to make certain that it is always told from his POV when possible. The "Waxer and Boil" is only one instance; you need to comb through the entire article and make sure others are corrected as well.  —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 19:44, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) *That was tough, because Waxer and Boil did almost anything together, but I've made some tweaking to make it read more from Boil's perspective. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 14:38, January 20, 2010 (UTC)