Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations

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(6 Inqs/0 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Havac 09:07, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) The blood coming from my eyes after reading this is a price well paid :P  Greyman ( Paratus ) 21:04, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Blarg! --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:16, 25 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:43, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 22:47, 4 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) I Gonkified it, so I'm gonna VOTE, dammit!  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 23:08, 4 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * Reference 62 is broken. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:14, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fixed. Havac 18:16, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * "Horn's escape from Lusankya, not dead, cleared Celchu's name completely." Reword this, or at least do something with that "not dead" part.
 * 5) **Reworded. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 6) * "As they arrived, however, he was captured by storm commandos; he attempted to warn off the Rebels. Luke Skywalker, commanding the group, decided to go attempt a rescue." Reword this, it reads awkwardly.
 * 7) **Reworded. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 8) * The bit about Seerdon is speculation. Remove it unless sourced, and none of this "well, logically, he would have to be," reasoning. I want a canonical explanation.
 * 9) **It doesn't say anything not supported by canon. He was in the unit. The unit did something. It doesn't take a genius to put two and two together. No one's saying he was canonically for sure in it, just that he was in the unit in that time period and the unit did a thing. Battleground: Tatooine doesn't say he's romantically interested in Winter, either; it just shows him saying things which could be interpreted as hitting on her. We use our brains and come to a conclusion. This is less bold a leap than that because all I'm saying is fact 1 + fact 2 = probable but not guaranteed. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 10) * "The battle went well for the odds against them and the unit escaped, but Fett evaded the Millennium Falcon." Reword.
 * 11) **Reworded. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 12) * I hope for your sake that starfighter combat is linked here somewhere. Goodwood
 * 13) **It does. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 14) * "With the cover of the Rogues and the opportunistic intervention of Darth Vader's forces against his longtime rival Xizor, they were able to flee." Who is they?
 * 15) **"...Skywalker went to Coruscant to rescue her with Rendar and Calrissian. During their escape, Rendar..." What you quoted is the next sentence. I've defined they as Rebels to please you, though. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 16) *You're not even close to the Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day part. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:01, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **I didn't really expect to be. Havac 17:39, 14 February 2008 (EST)
 * 18) Imperialles's image objections:
 * 19) * Image:Celchu-Academy.jpg: This one should be obvious.
 * 20) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Image:Green3Unedited-ROTJHD.jpg: Distorted.
 * 22) **Blame ILM. That's straight from the best version of the film that's publicly available. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:41, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Bah! --Imperialles 21:42, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Image:Tycho Endor.JPG: Poorly scanned.
 * 25) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * Image:Tycho rescues Wes.JPG: Distorted.
 * 27) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * Image:HospitalofDeath.jpg: Covered with distortion.
 * 29) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Celchuunderattack.jpg: Some .jpg artifacts.
 * 1) **Rescanned by Red.
 * 2) * Image:Celchu-vs-Phennir.jpg: .jpg articacts.
 * 3) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Image:Tycho-Masquerade.jpg: Scanning artifacts.
 * 5) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Image:Tycho-funeral.jpg: Distorted.
 * 7) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Image:Tycho-guns.jpg: Severely distorted.
 * 9) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * Image:TychoCelchu swenc.jpg: Stretched out.
 * 11) **Rescanned by Red. Havac 01:33, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Image:Tychomugshot.jpg: .jpg artifacts.
 * Image:TychoBilbringi.jpg: Quite distorted.
 * 1) **Rescanned by Red.
 * 2) * Image:BattleofLiinadeIII.jpg: Distortion.
 * 3) **If there's still any distortion, it's Random House's fault. If it's good enough for their marketing department, it should be good enough for us. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:07, 25 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Image:Celchu-B-wing.jpg: .jpg artifacts. Some cropping issues as well.
 * Image:Ushersofdeath.jpg: Artifacts.
 * 1) **Rescanned by Red.
 * Image:Celchu-Darklighter-Karrde.jpg: Artifacts.
 * 1) **Rescanned by Red.
 * 2) * Image:Tycho Celchu helmet.jpg: Poorly scanned.
 * 3) **Rescanned by Red. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:07, 25 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Image:Celchu-cockpit.jpg: Artifacts.
 * 5) * Image:Tycho-kiss.jpg: Severe distortion.
 * 6) **I cleaned this one up somewhat myself. Still could use Redification, but it's better than many comic scans that have passed FA before. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:07, 25 February 2008 (UTC)
 * --Imperialles 16:42, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Damn, I meant to mention in the comments . . . I've already asked Red to rescan these images. Though you're going to have to take up Culator's screenshot with him. Havac 18:16, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) First glance, "Antilles stayed behind to coordinate the attack until the last minute while Celchu made sure a shuttle was ready was for Antilles, who wifwhen contact was lost with Antilles."  -- "wifwhen"??? Who to the what now? I couldn't quite figure out what that sentence was actually supposed to say. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:17, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Redlinks. Darthchristian 16:18, 18 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *And we should be under the limit now. Havac 00:10, 20 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) I'm going through this bad boy in parts, so consider this Round 1:
 * 6) * Provide a brief description of who Winter is in the intro. "Rebel agent" should probably suffice
 * 7) **In. Havac 05:48, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Please specify Imp-II class: "Celchu was assigned to the Star Destroyer Accuser"
 * 9) **Specified. Havac 05:48, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * If possible, I would like to see a mention of what call-sign he flew under with the Rogues
 * 11) **Specified. Havac 05:48, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * I don't necessarily disagree with adding this, even though it is speculation, but if you're going to do that, you need to add all Rogue involvement during this time. Service during the Thila campaign specifically comes to mind, which is outlined to a degree in, among other sources I must assume, Galaxy Guide 3: "Celchu was also likely present in the squadron during the time of its campaign against Moff Kohl Seerdon"
 * 13) **I'll take a look tomorrow. Poke me on IRC about it. Havac 05:48, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * The way this is worded makes it seem as if it was a task force, when it was in fact the entire Alliance Fleet. Please reword: "Rogue Squadron was assigned to the Rebel fleet assaulting it" Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:24, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **Source that claim, because we definitely have other Rebel fleet actions going on in that period. Havac 05:48, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) Round Two:
 * 17) *Please specify ship class: "destroying their flagship carrier Flurry"
 * 18) **That's . . . deeply extraneous. It just bogs down the sentence in irrelevant detail. If you want to know what class it is, you click on the link. It's not relevant to Tycho what class it is. Havac 22:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * Please remove this unnecessary extrapolation: "though he may already have known her from earlier in the Rebellion"
 * 20) **Eh. It's not so much extrapolation, as they clearly know each other. I've made it more clear. Havac 22:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * I'd rather see this worded as "They infiltrated the system": "were infiltrated into the system"
 * 22) **Changed it. Havac 22:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Provide a brief description who Isard is: "where Ysanne Isard broke her captives" Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **Done. Havac 22:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Add "the" before all ship names in canonically-appropriate instances, per voted-upon policy. I'm not striking this until this is changed. This isn't your interpretation or preference, Havac. This is policy.
 * 26) **See policy, from consensus, which was later reinforced. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:05, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) ***Actually, SillyDan, who closed the last vote, has since realigned the MOS to reflect his understanding of the actual consensus that came out of the vote. And it says, "Go with canon." Havac 19:30, 5 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ****To clarify, Havac, does that mean that we go with "the" in front of the ship names that are canonically paired with "the" (which would be most of them, including "the Millennium Falcon") but we omit it in front of ship names that usually don't have it in canon (such as Binder)?  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 15:34, 8 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) *****So far as I can tell. Havac 21:19, 8 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Would be the longest FA were it to pass. Uh, I mean, it's a really quick read and you should all read it quickly and support. It's no burden at all. Havac 09:07, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Holy crap. This thing is freaking huge. Spelling and redirects check out now, but I haven't checked for link redundancy yet, because the motherkriffer has 730 links. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:17, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Not an objection, Havac, but a little request. Would it be possible to put in links for more of the various battles Tycho fights in? Other than in the Thrawn campaign section, I couldn't find many. In the Confederation-GA War you could have the Battle of Centerpoint Station (Confederation-Galactic Alliance War), the Attack on Toryaz Station etc which atm are not linked, and major stuff like the Battle of Borleias in the Yuuzhan Vong War as well. Earlier on, the Battle of Liinade III isn't either. I hate to think of them being orphaned on Wookieepedia's virtual knowledge map. Also, to remove the Tawaler redlink, you need to put one in for Siron Tawaler. Have a good day. Harrar 14:57, 16 February 2008 (UTC)

(2 Inqs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 04:07, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thanks, Star!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 00:24, 26 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Seems much improved now and a good job on an article with not much information on them. --  Riffsyphon  1024 04:08, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Nice job, Star.  Greyman ( Talk ) 04:07, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 2) * Infobox not fully sourced.
 * 3) * Can we get the introduction condensed into a smaller number of larger paragraphs, please?
 * 4) * Tense and OOU issues in the Early Life section.
 * 5) * Choppy prose and small paragraphs in the Sith-Imperial War section.
 * 6) * "After Calixte and Veed celebrated what they thought was Veed's promotion to Emperor, Calixte snuck over to Roal Fel's quarters and informed him to flee." Roal? Also, the second clause should be rewritten.
 * 7) * Small paragraphs that can be blended together in the P%T and Equipment sections as well.
 * 8) * Quotes in prose in the P&T section?
 * 9) *Unfortunately, without knowing that much about the Legacy comics, that's all I can offer.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 04:52, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) Toprawa:
 * 11) * Per other user objections infobox needs to be fully sourced. Including, please, the gender and species.
 * 12) * Also per previous user objections, no reason, in this case, to have two one-sentence paragraphs. Tack each onto the front and end of the middle paragraphs, respectively
 * 13) * Please reword this: "and she and Veed then plotted to place Veed on the Imperial throne"
 * 14) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 04:22, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * Two things with this. First, it needs to be rewritten into past tense; secondly, consider removing this entirely. Is it truly an IU axiom that little is known about her, or do we just know about her OOU because no other sources deal with her past? "Little has been recorded about the early life of Nyna Calixte."
 * 16) **That is no longer there.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) ***It is still there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:42, 4 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ****My bad. I thought i had removed it. To answer your original question, it's a little of both. I have reworded it.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:14, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * Are there alternative reasons why they feel she reached this position? If so, please include: "although some of her colleagues on the Moff Council claimed that she had not earned the honor through merit alone."
 * 20) **That's all that been revealed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Please rewrite or remove to avoid improper OOU/present tense tone.: "As far as it can be verified,"
 * 22) * Please avoid weasel words like "apparently." Did she despise her, or did she not? Make sure this isn't too speculative: "Gunn apparently despised her mother"
 * 23) **I was on crack when I wrote that. Gunn is explicity shown to hate her mother. Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Having never read these sources, I don't know what's going on here. Please elaborate on why the Empire was approached, keeping in mind articles should be written towards the casual reader: "When the new Sith Order first approached the Empire, they did so through her."
 * 25) **I fixed these (and the following few objections) while trying to focus on Nyna and not the war.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * A few things here. The article could benefit from an explanation of what's going on here; i.e, what were her motives in allying with the Sith? Why were the other Moffs needing manipulation? Who is Roan Fel? "She manipulated the other Moffs into allying with the Sith behind Roan Fel's back,"
 * 27) **See above.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) * You give a brief explanation of Fel here, in his second mention. This should be applied to his initial mention. And, you keep referring to him by his full name, which is unnecessary. Just "Fel" will suffice: "In 130 ABY, the Emperor Roan Fel"
 * 29) **See above.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) * This ties in with the previous two objections. You just kind of write this assuming the reader knows the details of the S-I war. Don't assume anything. What kind of conspiracy is this? "the extent of the Sith conspiracy"
 * 31) **See above.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * Ditto with the previous objections. Without an explanation of the war, this is very confusing. When did the GA get involved? "...that the Galactic Alliance"
 * 33) * Elaborate on what happened at Ossus, to provide a better explanation of why she is apologizing: "Calixte expressed her disapproval to Darth Maladi about the Massacre at Ossus"
 * 34) **See above.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * At this point, honestly, I'm lost. When and how did Veed apparently becoming Emperor in their eyes? "After Calixte and Veed celebrated what they thought was Veed's promotion to Emperor"
 * 36) **Fixed. 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) * Again, confusing. I thought she was expecting Veed to become Emperor? "she informed him that she knew that Darth Krayt was going to install himself as Emperor"
 * 38) **Clarified (hopefully).  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) * Please give a brief description of who Antares Draco is: "secretly making his escape with Antares Draco"
 * 40) **Imperial Knight. Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) * By the final paragraph in the S-I War section, I have no idea what you're even trying to say, or what's going on. I would suggest rewriting the section completely, again keeping in mind that if I, a dedicated SW fan, has no idea what's happening, imagine a casual visitor to this site.
 * 42) **I write articles with the intent that the reader clicks on the links provided if they want more information. I guess I shouldn't do that. :P  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) ***It reads much better now. And yeah, don't rely on links, i.e. other people, to do your writing for you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:06, 6 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) * Please elaborate on who Hosk Trey'lis is and why he's being interrogated: "she attended the interrogation of Hosk Trey'lis in Darth Maladi's laboratory..."
 * 45) **Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * Don't assume the reader knows what The Wheel is. Give a brief explanation of it: "After viewing one of Calixte's security cam feeds from the Wheel, they discovered that the Wheel was Cade's last known location"
 * 47) **Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) * If possible, it would be good to specify what she used exactly: "but not before she sprayed him with a gas"
 * 49) * If known, please explain what class of ship: "Corde then proceeded to carry Torlin back to his ship, the Raider"
 * 50) **I'm not good with ship stuff, so I couldn't tell you unless it was specifically stated somewhere.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 51) * You don't explain until much farther down in the paragraph that both of the ships are apparently shuttles of some sort. Please identify them upon their first mention: "She explained that there were two ships parked at the Wheel: one belong to Admiral Stazi of the Galactic Alliance, and the other was a ship that had defected to Roan Fel's faction of the Empire"
 * 52) * This seems speculative, from what I can gather. If you really can't prove that he's dead, don't speculate: " apparently killing him."
 * 53) **That was an artifact left over from the Morrigan Corde article that I had missed. Removed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) * Please reword: "that Gunn was one of the ones who..."
 * 55) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 04:34, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 56) * The way this is written suggests that the person who informed Veed is also the one hiring Corde, but it seems like you're referring to Calixte: "Upon sharing this info with Morlish Veed, he promptly hired Morrigan Corde"
 * 57) **Clarified. Graestan ( Talk ) 04:34, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) * Where is the Sith Temple? I can assume it is on Coruscant from the article, but please specify: "to remove Cade from the Sith Temple"
 * 59) **Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) * Please explain why she wants these: "that he turn over to her the three dozen Yuuzhan Vong thud bugs"
 * 61) **It is explained a bit later in the article; is this really necessary? Graestan ( Talk ) 02:35, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 62) * In that same sentence, briefly give an explanation of what Black Sun is
 * 63) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 04:34, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 64) * Is "predator" a special term to describe his forces/agents? If so, specify: "to pull his predators off the Temple on her signal"
 * 65) **Its referring to the ships under his command.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 66) ***Please specify this in the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 67) ****Changed to "Predator-class fighter." Graestan ( Talk ) 02:35, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 68) * Naturally, I can assume what you mean here, but please elaborate: "After Veed made some unwanted advances toward her, she left"
 * 69) **~sigh~ Do I have to write a porno? :P  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 70) ***I insist! ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 71) * As Calixte switches off between using her own name and the Corde identity, you alternate between writing from the perspective of either name. For example, here: After she left Veed's apartment, Corde then located Cade's friends..." This is unnecessary, and mildly confusing. When she switches to the Corde identity, don't continue to refer to her as such. Make a mention initially that she has made the change, and then keep describing her as Calixte only. Please rewrite the appropriate sentences.
 * 72) **I have replaced all relevant "Corde"s with "Calixte"s.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 73) ***Nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:00, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 74) * Briefly describe who these people are that they are arguing with: "Blue and Syn were locked in an argument with Kee and Chak over Cade's ship"
 * 75) **Smugglers. Done.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 76) * Explain what a boom bug is: "and others act as "boom bugs.""
 * 77) **Bugs that go BOOM! Jariah Syn lives for Boom, you know! :P Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 78) *As I progress through the article, I'm seeing increasingly more instances of play-by-play. Specifically, this paragraph. Please rewrite: "Corde then tasked Syn with keying a specific bug to follow Cade, etc."
 * 79) * You keep placing quotes around the term "boom bug." Unless this is done so explicitly in the source, doing so on each mention is unnecessary: "then to move the "boom bugs" near a hangar"
 * 80) **Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 81) * Please reword one of the Calixtes: "Back at Calixte's apartment, Calixte was in the middle of taking a shower"
 * 82) **Fixed.
 * 83) *Please note how in this same paragraph, starting "Back at Calixte's apartment," you have five sentences that start off the exact same way. "Corde then did this...Veed then did this...So and so then did this, etc." This is what I mean by instances of PBP, where things get very listy. Please rewrite.
 * 84) * Please rewrite. The use of "Sith" becomes obtrusive: "about the Sith coup in 130 ABY, thus betraying the Sith"
 * 85) **Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 86) * Inappropriate use of tense. Sounds very OOUish. Additionally, sounds very speculative. Unless the story substantiates this solidly, please remove: "...and as far it is known, has told no one about her identity as Morrigan Corde."
 * 87) **Well, considering that she has kept it even from Veed, who is the person closest to her (well, as close as she gets, anyway), I would say it's pretty certain that no one else knows. It's still too early to say for sure, though.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 88) ***In that case, I would definitely say remove it. This comes of as being rather ORish. This sounds like something that would do better to fit in the BTS, where OR/speculative info like this is more appropriate. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:09, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 89) ****Removed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 90) * This just ties in with the previous objection of saying she "apparently" despised her mother. This sentence suggests it was indeed true. Keep uniformity: "For her part, Gunn despised her mother"
 * 91) **Like I said, I was on crack. ~shrugs~  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 92) * Inappropriate OOU tense: "Calixte had once stated to Roan Fel that she has had some success in shielding her thoughts from Force users, even though there has been no evidence to suggest she was Force-sensitive."
 * 93) **Reworded.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 94) ***The sentence is still problematic. "has" has a very "nowish" tone to it, rather than a purely past tense tone. Additionally, the final clause referring to no evidence that she is Force-sensitive still lacks the appropriate IU tone. "Calixte has had some success in shielding her thoughts from Force users, even though there has been no evidence to suggest she was Force-sensitive." Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:09, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 95) * And, per Acky's comments below, these two sentences don't do the Calixte character enough credit to warrant their own section. Please move them unto the P&T
 * 96) * You need to provide a source for this information: "As Morrigan Corde, she had two distinguishing pieces of equipment; the first being her comm devices, and the second being her choker containing the holo of her family. Her comm devices were located on her face, and there were two of them: one under her left eye, and the other on her chin. It remains unknown exactly how they functioned."
 * 97) **I remember seeing it in a forum post by Jan Duursema. I'll go dig it up after work.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 98) ***K, I sourced it.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 05:51, 6 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 99) * This is an incomplete sentence: "Nyna Calixte was created by John Ostrander and Jan Duursema was first mentioned in Star Wars Legacy 0."
 * 100) **That was rectified by someone who was not me. Thanks, whoever you are! :D  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 101) * Please reword this clause: " which the scene was written in a way in that the reader is the only person privy to the secret"
 * 102) **Rewrote.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 103) * Not really an objection, but there seems to be enough concrete evidence that Calixte is the real persona, since we place the article under that name. Perhaps some kind of explanation discussing this? "but it remains unclear at this point which persona is the "real" one."
 * 104) **We don't know if Nyna or Morrigan (or neither) is her real name. I only put it at Calixte because IU, she is the more public persona.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:07, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 105) *Some final suggestions:
 * 106) *Per what I said about the SI War section, no matter how obvious the info may seem, never assume the reader knows what is going on. Make sure you write with the ignorant in mind, explaining who and what things are.
 * 107) *Also, per Wookification, please place referencing after punctuation. I've cleaned these instance up for you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:41, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 108) From Imperialles:
 * Image:Nyna Maladi Labo.jpg: Distorted. Get someone (Redemption) to re-scan it.
 * Image:Morrigan holo.jpg: Minor scan distortions at the bottom of the image. Ideally, it should be re-scanned.
 * 1) * Image:Morrigan commdevices.JPG: Needs to be cropped.
 * 2) **Is cropped. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 13:08, 26 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *What's the source for the pronunciation?
 * 4) **It's in the BTS.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 05:51, 6 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * Is it really necessary to split up the BTS section like that?
 * 6) **Not really. Fixed. Graestan ( Talk ) 04:22, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * --Imperialles 21:41, 25 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "Prior to the Sith-Imperial War, Calixte was using the persona of Morrigan Corde, and was working as an agent for Imperial Intelligence." Too many was ('s).
 * 3) **Is this better?  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * The third paragraph of the intro just reads awkwardly. Please fix the prose.
 * 5) **There is no third paragraph anymore. Someone (probably me) merged it into the second one.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * "Little has been recorded about the early life of Nyna Calixte." Should be "little was..."
 * 7) **Removed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * "However, prior to the Sith-Imperial War, she was using the name Morrigan Corde and was employed as an Imperial Intelligence agent." Rephrase.
 * I, and several others that I have queried on this matter, say this reads fine. Please state what exactly what you feel is wrong with it?  StarNeptune Talk to me! 05:51, 6 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) ***Actually, it seems fine to me now.
 * 2) * Why do you all her "Morrigan" sometimes and Morrigan others?
 * 3) **On crack. Fixed.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * De-link quote in "Sith-Imperial War".
 * 5) **Done.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *"...despised her mother for leaving her and her father and entering into an affair with Morlish Veed." She had an affair with Veed? Where did that come from? Please give context.
 * 7) *"...at his apartment." Is this necessary?
 * 8) **Why not? They could have been at her place, or at a bar/restaurant.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) *"Once Darth Krayt had installed himself on the throne after killing Roan Fel's double, he sent Maladi to Calixte's quarters to get the Moff to explain herself." Explain herself for what? Krayt knew about the double?
 * 10) *In "Search for Skywalker", state that Maladi does not know about her double identity. It seems as though she does.
 * 11) * "...then proceeded to tie the still-unconscious Torlin to a chair and familiarize herself with the ship and it weapons." It weapons?
 * 12) **Fixed the minor typo.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 19:14, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Corde then tasked Syn with keying a specific spy bug to follow Cade, park another spy bug outside Krayt's chambers, then to move the boom bugs near a hangar at the Sith Temple." Remove one of the thens.
 * 14) **Done.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * No offense, but the prose in the lone paragraph of Aftermath is just bad.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:06, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) **Better?  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:37, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Technically, this is still under spoiler warning, so navigate with care.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 04:07, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Good to have you back in action, Toney! :-D Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 04:50, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Neptune, I would suggest merging the powers and abilities section with the P&T, unless it can be expanded; there isn't, IMHO, enough info there atm to warrant its own section.-- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:24, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * I won't make this an objection per se but the article seems rather...void of life. By life I mean images. You can probably put in one more in each section (minus early life as it's short and aligned with the infobox.) -- Redemption [[Image:Redemptionusersymbol.png|25px]] (Talk) 04:19, 27 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Working on that now.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 05:51, 6 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:41, 8 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:15, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:28, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ozzel 05:21, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) You have a thing for Hoth.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:15, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) --Eyrezer 10:05, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Greyman ( Talk ) 19:09, 15 March 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) That image is pretty terrible. Can another one be acquired?  Graestan ( Talk ) 01:58, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *I uploaded a new version with far less artifacts. If necessary, I can upload a .png version instead (better quality, bigger file size). --Imperialles 02:12, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Much better.

Comments
 * There are no pictures for him. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:41, 8 March 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 05:23, 9 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice job with the objections, Goodwood.  Greyman ( Talk ) 02:50, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Indubitably!  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:04, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Took care of the meatballs from the pasta bowl over the IRC.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 05:32, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Very nice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:22, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 23:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) 100% Wookieepedia Dept. of Ataru certified.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) From the Grey of Man:
 * 2) * The homeworld is currently listed as "possibly Onderon". Is there a quote from the game that leads the player to assume this? If there is, it might be convenient to add an additional ref tag with the quote, and/or explain the reason that it's assumed Onderon is his homeworld. Like you know, it's been a long time since I've played the game, so I'm just curious what led to the "possibly" :)
 * 3) **Hmm. No, there really isn't. Dunno how that got in there, but have now removed it. We don't know where his homeworld is.
 * 4) * In the intro: "Having been seen in a heated argument with Captain Sullio, an officer in the Onderon military who had been a social companion of his for some time previously, he was detained as a suspect in her murder." To me, that's an awkward and long sentence. Would it be possible to have it broken up, or rewritten a little bit? I get what the sentence is trying to convey, but I think it could be clarified a little bit.
 * 5) **Hopefully that's better.
 * 6) * In the intro: "When the Jedi Exile visited Iziz during her quest to find the Jedi Masters who had originally exiled her..." When she traveled to Iziz, did she know which specific Master she was seeking? If so, it might be worthwhile to to say, When the Jedi Exile visited Izis in search of Jedi Master X&hellip;". Just a suggestion.
 * 7) **Should be better.
 * 8) * At the end of the article, you allude to the fact that it is believed that Ghent laid low after his encounter with the Exile, and later during the civil war. You might want to mention that, or something similar, at the end of the intro as well.
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) * From first paragraph of "Involvement with the Exile": "When the Jedi Exile, accompanied by Mandalore, arrived in Iziz while on the hunt for the Jedi Master Kavar, who was in hiding on that world, the Mandalorian leader informed her that Ghent was the key to securing a meeting with the former Jedi Council member." To me, it seems a little cluttered and left me re-reading small parts of it. Please attempt to break this up, and/or rewrite it so it's not jumping from point to point.
 * 11) **That should be a bit better.
 * 12) * In the above sentence, is the Mandalore you mention actually Canderous Ordo? (Remember, it's been a while since I've played the game :P) If so, a piped link would be nice, but changing Mandalore to Canderous Ordo would be preferred.
 * 13) **Yes it is. Changed "the Mandalorian leader" to "Ordo".
 * 14) * From the third paragraph of "Involvement with the Exile": "After learning this, Mandalore expressed his displeasure at the actions of his friend." You explain in the sentence before this the events surrounding Xaart, but a little clarification of why Mandalore was displeased should be present. Even something simple like a former Mando collaborating with the Republic, etc etc.
 * 15) **He doesn't really go into detail about why he's not happy with this, actually, but added an extrapolation anyway.
 * 16) * From the same paragraph as above: "Ghent was able to secure a meeting with Kavar for the Exile, which took place in the cantina he so often frequented." The name of the cantina would probably fit better, if available, me thinks.
 * 17) **The cantina in question is actually unnamed.
 * 18) * From the P&T: "he was often described as being the worst doctor that one could ever have the misfortune to be treated by." Starting at "as being", is this a direct quote? If it is, it needs to be italicized. If not, then you never saw this objection, so move along...move along.
 * 19) **No, it's not. :-)
 * 20) *Other than these minor things, it's a good read :) Greyman ( Talk ) 02:06, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) **Thanks mate, it's been a project of mine since my earliest days on the Wook.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 02:39, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 23) * Last sentence of intro may be unnecessary. Also, his whereabouts were unknown to whom?
 * 24) **Nuked it.
 * 25) * Reword/repunctuate for clarity: "The reason for his detainment was based on a testimony taken from witnesses after the incident stating that he and Sullio had been involved in a heated argument together, immediately prior to the soldier's death."
 * 26) **Rewrote the sentence entirely.
 * 27) * Break up into two sentences: "After learing of Ghent's predicament, the pair gathered clues from the crime scene and interviewed various patrons at the cantina, which included Nikko, a Beast Rider named Panar, a slicer named Kiph, and the cantina's Bith owner, the Jedi Exile and her party were able to acquire the remains of a droid that had witnessed the murder of Sullio."
 * 28) **Busted up.
 * 29) * "in light of recent events" – You might as well mention the Purge in a short clause.
 * 30) **Done.
 * 31) * "presumably kept a low profile during the civil war that followed" – Again, unnecessary, and might be seen as speculative.
 * 32) **Nuked that clause. Had a bad feeling about it and the first objection anyway, so it's no big deal. :-)
 * 33) * Graestan ( Talk ) 04:20, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **Thanks mate.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 19:21, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) Toprawa:
 * 36) * Please reword one of these contacts. I might suggest political connections, if appropriate? "the political contacts necessary to arrange contact"
 * 37) **Fixed, thanks.
 * 38) * Not really an objection. Probably just my not understanding the game, but what is the difference between the main plot and the quest? "as he holds the key to finding one of the lost Jedi Masters as part of the main plot and quest"
 * 39) **In the case of this game, to speak of one is to speak of the other; the storyline of the game centers around the Exile attempting to come to grips with her past in order to fight the Sith, and that includes finding the Jedi Masters at Atris's behest -- in the dark side version this means tracking them down to seek revenge for her exile, while in the canonical light side plot she seeks them out in order to unite them against the Sith Triumvirate. If you wish more clarification, please let me know.
 * 40) ***Understood. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:22, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) *Well-written and clean. Nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) **Thank you sir.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 19:08, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) From the desk of you-know-who
 * 44) **Who, Voldemort?
 * 45) * Does Mandalore's comment always appear? If not, should it be moved to BTS or require the game mechanics template?
 * 46) **Only if you talk to Xaart, which is optional.
 * 47) * If there's any specific information not already included that the interviewed patrons give, please do so.
 * 48) **Included relevant info.
 * 49) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:54, 15 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) *It's been a great one so far, thanks. :-) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 00:26, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * A better infobox picture is OTW, as well as a shot of his office. -- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 05:23, 9 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Can't believe I got this thing to 1000 words. Toprawa and Ralltiir 08:25, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:10, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 14:05, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * Word count at 1,017. No picture of Lenso exists. Toprawa and Ralltiir 08:25, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Clean as a whistle. Very short, though&mdash;were it not for the depth of Lenso's emotional turmoil, I'd say there wasn't enough content. Graestan ( Talk ) 14:05, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:33, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Lenso and Datch: Rogues Havac didn't have time for. :P  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:33, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Back with another character from the X-Wing series. All comments and criticisms are welcome. Thanks! --Colinmcev 07:20, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:21, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From a quick glance, the succession box at the bottom needs to be referenced like you would the infobox. Names, titles, dates, etc. I'm looking forward to going through this article. It looks good from what I can see :)  Greyman ( Talk ) 14:33, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done. And thanks! I enjoyed working on it. --Colinmcev 14:43, 11 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From Admirable's Ackbar
 * 4) * You mention, indirectly, the Battle of Borleais in the first paragraph of the biography. I would advise against this, since it assumes the reader has read the intro. The biography should be able to stand alone. If you know what I mean. I would change "...serve him on Borleias" to "...serve him in later years" or something to that effect.
 * 5) **I gotcha. Changed it to later years. --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * You mention that he gained the rank of Colonel in the first paragraph, and then that he was a colonel before Yavin in the next paragraph. Same thing with the 181st in those two paragraphs. Please adjust.
 * 7) **Fixed the first one. As for the second, I took the 181st reference out of Early Life and moved it to the first paragraph of the next section. What do you think? --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Perfect. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:21, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Same thing as the first objection in the last paragraph of "Commander of the 181st." If someone knew nothing about the character and hadn't read the intro, they would be confused by this. I suggest a similar solution to the first objection.
 * 10) **Got it. I'll have to keep this in mind for future contributions. --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Please give Fel a rank or something when you introduce him.
 * 12) **I added a rank. Do you think that's enough? I figured the rest of the background is covered by the Rand Ecliptic reference later that sentence. --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Looks fine. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:21, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "...remind them we're here" should probably be paraphrased without the quotation marks.
 * 15) **Changed it to "draw attention to the wing." --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * "Palpatine, who seemed became familiar with Derricote". Wording is off there. I would've fixed it myself, but I wasn't sure entirely what you were saying, and having not read the source material I might've messed it up.
 * 17) **Whoops. Fixed. --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * In "Creating the Emperor's Plague," you again mention events which haven't happened at that point in time. "Derricote developed this particular plague more than two years before engineering the Krytos virus that would be unleashed upon Coruscant." I understand that what you're saying is important, but I would move this that sentence and everything after it in that paragraph further down, to where the Krytos virus is mentioned.
 * 19) **I started to put this in with the Krytos virus section, but then I thought maybe it works better in the last "Emperor's Plague surfacing" section. I thought it worked there better, but let me know what you think; we could easily bump it back up. --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Looks fine. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:22, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * There's a lot of present tense in the P&T. Please sort this out.
 * 22) **I think I got it all. --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * I would like you to link everything once in the Intro and once in the main body. Also, you should look for where you can link articles, since I noticed some places where a link could've been inserted.
 * 24) **Done on the first part. As for the second, you were right, I found a lot of things that could've been linked. I think I got them all but if you see any more, feel free to fix them or let me know.
 * 25) ***Looks fine. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:21, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) *Great work on this. It's nice to see noms from my favorite books, particularly non-Rogue articles. Excellent image choices, too. Keep up the good work :) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:52, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) **Thanks! --Colinmcev 05:11, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) Toprawa:
 * 29) *The introduction is too overdone. I'd like to see just two solid paragraphs, while cutting off the fat and leaving the most important facts.
 * 30) **I tightened it into two paragraphs. Let me know what you think, and whether you think anything I cut should have stayed in. --Colinmcev 02:52, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) *This objection may be N/A after your changes to the previous one, but you say that, "after leading the 181st to victory at the Battle of Derra IV in 3 ABY, was promoted to General and given command of an Imperial outpost on Borleias," and then follow it up with, "Before accepting the post around 4 ABY..." I added the 3 ABY for you, but Derra IV took place early in 3 ABY, just prior to Hoth. Something doesn't quite add up to me if he was given the post but didn't accept it until a year later?
 * 32) **I fixed this when I tightened the intro. Basically, what I was trying to say was Derricote was given command of Borleias after the Battle of Derra IV, but he was given his special assignment by Palpatine sometime before he actually assumed command, which happened somewhere between the battle in 3 ABY and Palpatine's death in 4 ABY. I explained this very poorly in the intro, but I think in the article itself it's pretty clear, so I think this objection has been addressed now. --Colinmcev 02:52, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) *Do we know what Star Destroyer this was, specifically? Also, was the 181st attached to this Star Destroyer? If so, I would like to see a description of this much earlier in the article: "Upon returning to the Imperial II-class Star Destroyer after the battle"
 * 34) **Unfortunately, I don't believe it is known what Star Destoyer this is. I only know from the Baron Fel comic that there was a Star Destroyer there, it's never identified. If it's too distracting, I can remove the reference to the Destroyer altogether? --Colinmcev 02:52, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) *Will finish this up later. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:42, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not really an objection, but I think it would look much better in the intro if you could provide an actual estimate for the lives lost due to the viruses. I remember reading it when working on Isard; I'll look it up and get back to you. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 08:35, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I will check, but if you can find that yourself I'd much appreciate it. The only reference I recall finding so far was hundreds of thousands, if not millions, as I put it, but I think it'd be stronger with something more exact. If you find it before I do, let me know where you find it. --Colinmcev 14:17, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, I can't find the exact reference :(. I suggest you just go for millions, though, if the source says "thousands or millions." -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:54, 12 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1)  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:25, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Remember doing a bit of work on this article waaaay back in the day.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 05:04, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Schya! Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:56, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) With some fixes made in IRC, good article considering the limited detail available.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:41, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Yay for obscure FAs! -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:12, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Voting after looking over it might help&hellip;  Graestan ( Talk ) 12:45, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:23, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * The second clause in this sentence, starting a document, reads awkwardly. I'm not sure what you're trying to say: "she also inherited the sacred scroll, a document where her long-dead relative had written a part of the Jedi Code."
 * 3) **Clarificated.
 * 4) * Please remove this unknown phrasing. Additionally, the latter half of the sentence will probably need to be relocated to somewhere more appropriate in the article: "Following this, it was unknown if she returned to wandering or remained on Yashuvhu"
 * 5) **Removified.
 * 6) * Ditto for this same sentence: "It was unknown if she returned to traveling with the assistance of those she met earlier in life or remained on Yashuvhu permanently"
 * 7) **Nixificated.
 * 8) * This sentence has a few issues. First, in accordance with previous objections, please remove the "unknown" phrasing. Secondly, it needs to be reworded to be written in appropriate past tense. Thirdly, unless the source explicitly states that she was possibly skilled in this manner and this is not just extrapolation, it would need to be removed entirely. "Details of all her abilities remains unknown, though it is possible that she was skilled with the ability to create Force illusions"
 * 9) **Reworkified into earlier part of paragraph.
 * 10) *Excellent BTS. Always a treat to read your articles, Fiolli. I demand more! Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:10, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thank you, sir! One more to go in the series.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 15:48, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 13) * Why is it "haz[sic]" in the quote? She's a Barabel, she speaks funny.
 * 14) **Yes, she does speak funny. Nevertheless, it is an intentional spelling by the original author and not a transcription error. This remains because that is proper etiquette regardless of how seemingly obvious, due to her species, such a misspelling might be or expected. Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:57, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * "...she eagerly learned of the Jedi and sought to join the Jedi Order." Eagerly seems like it's in the wrong place.
 * 16) **How so? I'm sorry, but I don't follow. "Eagerly" is the appropriate type of modifier for "learned" in this instance.
 * 17) ***I see what you are trying to say now.
 * 18) * "With her skill of learning languages, she quickly acquired a facility with Galactic Basic Standard." Perhaps rephrase:"as she was skilled with languages..."
 * 19) **Adjusted the sentence.
 * 20) * You use "wander" in two consecutive sentences in the intro.
 * 21) **Fixed.
 * 22) * Same thing but with "also" in the first paragraph of bio.
 * 23) **Fixed.
 * 24) * "...as she was known to have never had a mate." Why not "she never had a mate"?
 * 25) **Fixed.
 * 26) * "In 28 ABY, Jedi Master Luke Skywalker discovered a series of documents in the Chiss Expeditionary Library on Csilla regarding Valara Saar and her home planet while searching for information regarding Zonama Sekot." Too many "regarding's".
 * 27) **Fixed.
 * 28) * You use "wander" too much in P&T.
 * 29) **Fixed.
 * 30) *  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:10, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Second article from the Yashuvhi-style pasta specials. Refer to the first, Yashuvhu, as needed.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:25, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Not really an objection, but could the image be cropped a bit, to around her waist? It's a pet peeve of mine to have lots of text adjacent to the infobox, and shortening the image would help that greatly. Excellent work as usual, Fiolli. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:59, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I don't really have the capability to do that well on my computer at the moment. If someone else can, I'd have no objection. My only comment would be that quite a few articles link to that image, though a better one might be found on the Wizards website to use as the base image. Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:57, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I had a go at cropping it myself, but everything I came up with looked off. Probably best to leave as is :) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:12, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 15:27, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:25, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Pasta bowl fixed via IRC.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:58, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Some minor corrections made, but an excellent article overall. Good job.  Greyman ( Talk ) 00:27, 16 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the lair of Hobbes15
 * 2) *Source the lead quote, please.
 * 3) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) *If possible, add a section name for the first part of Biography, seeing as the second part has one.
 * 5) **I don't understand why&hellip; It doesn't seem to fall under a subcategory. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Personally, I guess it seems weird to have one half of the bio sectioned but not the other. Even something like Early Activity is fine with me. But if you don't think it makes sense to do so, I'm fine with it; it just doesn't look all that great to me personally. Hobbes ( Tiger's Lair ) 01:46, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Title added. You're one tough cookie. Have you met Toprawa? Graestan ( Talk ) 02:51, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *Besides that, great article. Enjoy your return to action ;). Hobbes ( Tiger's Lair ) 21:46, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) Toprawa:
 * 10) * First quote needs to be sourced.
 * 11) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * Just want to confirm this with you. Does Oss Willum putting him back together necessarily mean he had no knowledge of droid maintenance? Seems like possible extrapolation. "However, he possessed no knowledge of droid maintenance,[1] and was unable to repair himself, as was evidenced when Oss Wilum had to put ThreeDee back together following the attack by Bogga's henchmen."
 * 13) **His skills do not include the repair of droids, per the Tales of the Jedi Companion, which I cite for that bit of information. Oss having to fix him simply reinforces this. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ***Good, good. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:25, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * Source list should be ordered my publication date. Additionally, you say that he was created for the TOTJ comic, but yet you have him appearing in the first edition to A Guide to the Star Wars Universe, which was published in 1984, well before his first appearance. Am I missing something?
 * 16) **I've ordered the sources, seeing as I added the ones other that TOTJC. Also, it seems the 1st Ed was i error :S --Eyrezer 21:37, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) ***Thanks, Eyre. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * Also, please add a tag where appropriate.
 * 19) **Done. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * Finally, I have a Star Wars Encyclopedia entry for you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:39, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) **Ah? Hope to catch you on IRC soon, then. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:45, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Information snagged, citation added to article. Thanks! Graestan ( Talk ) 02:58, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * WP:TOTJ hard at work.
 * It's... it's back :P! Hobbes ( Tiger's Lair ) 20:17, 12 March 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:21, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thanks Ataru.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:00, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:07, 13 March 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Things Fiolli didn't have time to mention earlier:
 * 2) * "Unlike Organa Solo, who adhered to her word to keep the meetings private, the duplicitous Spaar was already compromising the conditions of his conferences with the Chief of State." Second "already" in two sentences seems a bit awkward. Sorry.
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) * "Spaar insisted that all the Yevetha desired was to return to their homeworld, and Organa Solo capitulated in the midst of the public relations disaster, lowering the shields and allowing the Aramandia to leave Coruscant." I'm not sure what this means, to be honest.
 * 5) **Rephrased it.
 * 6) * "Only one being escaped, a Grannan named Plat Mallar, who managed..." Only one having escaped...?
 * 7) **Fixed.
 * 8) * "Spaar was greeted by thousands of adoring Yevetha, who now viewed him as god-like. His return was nothing short of triumphant, and the general populace of the Yevetha adored Spaar." Perhaps reorganizing the clauses like this: "Spaar's return was nothing short of triumphant as he was greeted by thousands of adoring Yevetha. The general populace showed great adoration, viewing his as god-like." Maybe something like this might be a little less redundant and more smooth.
 * 9) **Simplified it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:00, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ***Thank you, Chack.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:07, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) *Nice work, Ataru.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 05:48, 13 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) I never thought I would be able to dig up this old quote... but I underestimated Google's awesomeness: (Dan's 6/5/02 post). I think it's worth mentioning in the BTS. -- Ozzel 10:12, 14 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *Mentioned. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:07, 14 March 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Yet another WP:NEGTC nomination. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:21, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I can't object with this, because I have no idea where I read it, but I know that somewhere someone (Rostini? Dan?) sais that the reason he has an eye in is hand is because Sutfin thought it would look cool.