Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Santhou Lazith'chika


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Santhou Lazith'chika

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:05, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: From WEG, I offer you: An NPC gamemasters did not even bother to role-play! At least I didn't.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) On condition that the other objections are addressed. -  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:19, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 23:54, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:35, October 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:34, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Cleaned up spelling. Otherwise, looks pretty good to me.   Trak Nar  Ramble on 09:16, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Looks good! ~ SavageBob 00:27, October 31, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) * "Lazith'chika had authority over several members of the Rebel Alliance, even if he was only arguably an officer." Well, was he or wasn't he? If the source doesn't explicitly say he was, then neither can we.
 * 3) ** This is still a little unclear. If he was not an officer, than I would change the "if" in that sentence, to "though". (i.e. "...even though he was not an officer.")
 * 4) ***Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * "Unidentified" should not be used in IU articles.
 * 6) ** Neither should "Unknown"
 * 7) ***Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * "Creepy" is a little too colloquial.
 * 9) * "and to pretend to be a harmless clown." It's not very clear here if you're being figurative or literal.
 * 10) * "of their goals and motivation" What exactly is meant here by "motivation"?
 * 11) * "the species inhabiting there" Do you mean the species inhabiting the galaxy, or the aforementioned planets? Please specify.
 * 12) * "The Long Shot Campaign" is italicized in the Appearances section, but not in the BTS. Which of these is correct? Also, please create at least a stub for the article.
 * 13) *Also, in the future, please watch your linking. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 14:30, October 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) **All done, thank you for your review and advice. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:26, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 16) * Everything looks good except for one thing: The final sentence of the lead section sounds odd to me. Do you mean that Humans find him scary-looking, but when they get to know him, they find him good-natured? Can you reword this bit? Otherwise, nice work! ~ SavageBob 14:44, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) Soresu
 * 19) * A little intro expansion seems appropriate for an article of this size. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:11, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) **Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) A couple more: the intro does not make sense chronologically. After the first paragraph, it sort of just throws random information at the reader, with no real sense of order. Also, there's no need for it to be split into four paragraphs; with the amount of information in it right now, it should probably be combined into two.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:15, October 27, 2009 (UTC)

Comments


 * I'm using here an image from the webstrip Rookies: Rendezvous originally appearing as Hyperspace-only material (no longer available there). Having found no written policy about use of partial images from Hyperspace, I understand I can use it as per these precedents: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 11, 12, 13, 14, 15, 16, 17, some of them FA's. If those images can't used, this is a good moment to tell, to write that policy somewhere and to update all those articles.