Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Stewjon

Stewjon

 * Nominated by: Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 11:14, August 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Tried a CAN and it got too long. Hopefully it's fine now. Thanks for the help random users!

Support

 * 1) Assuming Xd's outstanding objections will be fixed. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 16:37, September 3, 2010 (UTC)

Darn you, GL

 * BTS needs to use quote, not dialogue, format.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:44, August 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Used quote from official website instead --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 06:51, August 30, 2010 (UTC)

Darn you, Chack ^^

 * Context on Obi-Wan in the body.
 * Context on Coruscant in the body.
 * What kind of context exactly? --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 06:51, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Something like "Jedi Master" and "capital planet of the Republic" would fit.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 13:43, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Exactly, or "galactic capital". -- 1358  (Talk) 14:21, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 08:38, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Er, not done. -- 1358  (Talk) 12:24, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * If you are talking about the first sentence of the History section, I decided not to say Jedi Master Obi Wan because it's talking about him when he wasn't a Jedi. Instead I went with "begin his training to become a Jedi Master" later in the paragraph which is more appropriate. Coruscant is called the galactic capital in the article --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 00:10, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * You still need to link Kenobi, and in my opinion, he could have same slight context like 'Human'. Also, link The galaxy|galactic ]]  [[capital ]] . --  1358  (Talk) 06:17, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * How about now? --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 07:50, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks good. -- 1358  (Talk) 11:43, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * "Stewjon was named during "The Main Event" at Celebration V, an interview between the Star Wars creator George Lucas and talk show host Jon Stewart.." So Celeb V was an interview between Lucas and Stewart?
 * Changed --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 06:51, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll read through it later. -- 1358  (Talk) 17:00, August 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Please kill the redlink. -- 1358  (Talk) 12:24, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 00:10, September 4, 2010 (UTC)

From the Council Chambers:

 * The YouTube video you used as a source for the BTS quote has been taken down by Lucasfilm. You need to find another way of sourcing it, or the quote will have to go. Please be aware that if you find another YouTube video of the interview to use as a source, it will likely be taken down as well very soon. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 05:09, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Changed to quote on official website now. --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 06:51, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * "After being knighted, he visited his family occasionally, though not enough to create a strong relationship between them, as to not go against the Jedi Code.": Exactly where is this information from? You have it sourced to both The Hidden Past and Obi-Wan's Databank entry, but I cannot find it in either one. &mdash; Master Jonathan New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 18:02, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Changed after reading the actual text. Haha --Vandar Tokare42 (Talk to the hand) 08:38, September 3, 2010 (UTC)

The Wizard did it
You dare to nominate an article, you must pay the comma-quences!! ;)--''' Bonslywizard ( Send a transmission...It's perfectly legal! ) 03:12, September 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * You don't need to link to "Human" twice. Just the first time will do.
 * Can you find a quote from The Hidden Past to put as the lead quote?
 * Remove the comma before "and his family".
 * In one of the quotations in the BTS, you have the comma before the quotation mark as opposed to after. Fix this.
 * Actually, there are two. Fix them.


 * Hey Bonsly, most of these fall under the unofficial   clause, which is basically that objections as minor as misplaced commas or a duplicate link should simply be fixed by the reviewer rather than objected to. All except the quote objection fall under that clause here. Also, since I'm typing here anyway, I'll let you know that I'm familiar with the Jedi Apprentice series, and there are no relevant quotes available. One other thing: After looking at the article again, the commas are already correctly placed relative to the quotation marks; this is one of the differences between American and British/Canadian English. :) &mdash; Master Jonathan  New Jedi Order.svg ( Jedi Council Chambers ) 03:24, September 5, 2010 (UTC)