Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Decoy Squad Five


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Decoy Squad Five

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 07:32, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first quickie nom.

(2 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cylka  -talk- 06:53, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Grunny  (Talk) 06:58, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 06:22, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) DC 17:04, 24 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:58, 30 January 2009 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Cylka:
 * 2) * Order 66 and Operation: Knightfall need a bit of context, just to show why the squad was there to eliminate Jedi and why Jedi would be coming to the Temple.
 * 3) **Contextificated. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 15:52, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * They were bred to not only have quick reflexes, but to also be very alert. You might want to add that in.
 * 5) **Added. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 15:52, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * Was there any reason given for them being called a decoy squad? I mean we can figure out why they were called such, but was there a verifiable explanation?
 * 7) **Nope, sorry. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 15:37, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * They were approached by a hunchbacked man, who drooled constantly and was unable to complete proper words but able to get his meaning across, - Thinking about this, I'm not sure that you need but able to get his meaning across. You might want to think about either rewording or getting rid of it. This really isn't as much of an objection as it is just something to think about.
 * 9) **Removed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 15:37, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * Make sure that all of the information given in the intro is in the main body of the article as well.
 * 11) **Done. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 17:36, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) *Good work for a small mention. Cylka  -talk- 04:34, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) Grunny
 * 14) * "The squad, disguised in Jedi robes, was deployed at the Coruscant Jedi Temple's downlevel loading dock; where every day, the Jedi had imported food and supplies that they could not grow in the gardens of the Temple themselves, after the enacting of Order 66, a measure programmed into the clones that told them to kill their Jedi commanders; every clone from even before the Clone Wars began was programmed to do this, and the subsequent Operation: Knightfall; Darth Vader's march on the temple, killing almost all of the Jedi inside and the activation of a beacon informing surviving Jedi that the war was over and to return to the temple, only to be killed by the clone upon doing so." Can you break this sentence up?
 * 15) **Fixed? NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 05:56, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Nice work beefing up the article :-).  Grunny  (Talk) 03:56, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Thank you, I was bored out of my mind. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 05:56, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) Could you mention that Obi Wan and Yoda were in disguise when you link them, and give them context? Thanks, DC 21:52, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) *Fixed? NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 23:21, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) * Bah, one more thing: "After the subsequent Operation: Knightfall, Darth Vader's march on the Temple that resulted in the death of almost all of the Jedi inside and the activation of a beacon informing surviving Jedi that the war was over and ordering them to return to the Temple, Decoy Squad Five was posted here to intercept and kill the returning Jedi." Way too many "ands", and is a run-on. Break it up and have it make more sense. DC 21:57, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **Fixed for the final time I hope. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 23:21, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) Soresu
 * 23) *I can't believe I completely missed this nom until yesterday.
 * 24) ** Infobox says 7 clones, intro and body say 8.
 * 25) ***Don't forget the sergeant, also in the infobox, he makes 8. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 05:29, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) ****I'm striking, but I'm not too sure about it. A sergeant is still a member of the group, is he not? Just because he's already stated earlier doesn't mean he shouldn't be included. 06:22, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) *****After looking at other squad srticles, I changed it to 8. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 01:12, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) ** To that end, they had disguised themselves by wearing Jedi robes, and had been bred to possess very quick reflexes and to be constantly alert. Would prefer only one 'and' in a sentence.
 * 29) ***Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 05:43, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) ** After the subsequent Operation: Knightfall, Darth Vader's march on the Temple that resulted in the death of almost all of the Jedi inside and the activation of a beacon sent to all surviving Jedi. 'After the subsequent' doesn't make sense after you split the sentence. I think DC wouldn't mind it being like this: After the subsequent Operation: Knightfall, Darth Vader's march on the Temple that resulted in the death of almost all of the Jedi inside, a beacon was sent to all surviving Jedi informing them that the war was over and ordering them to return to the Temple. Decoy Squad Five was posted here to intercept and kill the returning Jedi. It seems short enough, and it keeps the different topics in separate sentences.  05:07, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) ***I approve. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 05:29, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) Cav's squadron briefing:
 * 33) * Regarding Order 66 being "programmed" into the clones; I'm not sure that this is correct, and seem to recall LFL stating that it was not a hardwired command, but the Clones simply followed orders. Clones have been known to resist Order 66. Please check this. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 09:40, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **This has to be the third thing that I distinctly remember reading in the NEC that's changed. Now it says they were trained for it. I fixed it. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 12:38, 22 January 2009 (UTC)