Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/17,000 BBY


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

17,000 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:38, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The years return. With the Great Manifest Period completely done, it is onward to the Indecta Era.

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) In times of old, when time was young. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 06:11, April 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) I always thought Yarael Poof was a mutant. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:19, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:07, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 11:35, April 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 19:46, April 20, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy's starting to feel old
 * 2) * The galaxy: 'believing it to be their "rightful" place' I think the quotation marks are not needed, as you explain that it's a quote. Your decision.
 * 3) **That word is used in quotes in the source material. I just decided to change it.
 * 4) * The galaxy: "Although illegal within Republic space, the scientists operated outside of the Republic's borders,[8] seeking to perform genetic experimentation on sentient species." Your wording suggests that the scientists themselves, their existence, not their activities, was illegal within Republic space
 * 5) **Fixed.
 * 6) *Come on, only 25,046 noms more and we'll have all the Old Republic era.Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:21, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) **Well, want to help? &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 14:07, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Soresu
 * 9) * However, the event escalated into actual fighting. A near–civil war was only avoided How can you avoid a near-civil war? You either avoid a civil war or have a near-civil war. Also, the two sentences seem contradictory. Perhaps you could use full-fledged civil war like you did in the intro.
 * 10) **Tweaked it.
 * 11) * seeking to perform genetic experimentation on sentient species because such actions were illegal within Republic space. This makes it sound like the reason for their experimentation was because it was illegal.
 * 12) **I'm not completely satisfied with it, but it works now and is correct on all fronts.
 * 13) * the desire to usurp the capital coupled with the competition in the Slice caused periodic unrest the final conflict occurred in 3,017 BBY. Doesn't make sense. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:01, April 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **Word was missing but has been added. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:12, April 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) Chack:
 * 16) * "Inside the Republic, the conflict between Alsakan and Coruscant was the first of seventeen such conflicts between the two planets." Could you replace one of these "conflicts" with a synonym?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:44, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Done.
 * 18) * Also, there's no need to have links in "Events" when they're already in the article elsewhere. This isn't really an objection, since I fixed it, but a note to you to remember for the future.
 * 19) **I was under the impression from earlier noms that it was wanted since this section was essentially a carryover of the timeline format that originally existed; that way, this subsection itself could be used for easy browsing. I may have misinterpreted it, but I was under the impression that it was necessary. This is something we can talk about later as it is an easy fix either way.
 * 20) *Otherwise, well done.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:44, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) **Thanks, Chack. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:58, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) Just one minor thing: "17,000 BBY received direction mention in The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia under the entries "Quermian" and "Xexto," as well." Is this supposed to be "direct mention"? Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:15, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) *Heh, yes. Fixed. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:05, April 14, 2010 (UTC)

Comments


 * Updated with information from The Written Word. This was one of the hold-ups in even getting this one done. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:38, April 4, 2010 (UTC)