Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Dllr Nep


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Dllr Nep

 * Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:57, April 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Best read over a few mugs of the juice!

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Just a couple of tense tweaks. Excellent read, GT. Maybe one of my new favorite characters. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:14, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Imperialles 21:41, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Great job. I always liked this character from the X-Wing series. —Tommy  9281 21:53, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Although Requiem is still just total randomness. Thefourdotelipsis 01:40, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:11, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:11, May 19, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A few things:
 * 2) * You use the term "the Rogues" throughout the article, which seems somewhat informal. Disregard this if the term was formally used by the NR military, of course.
 * 3) **It's used IU by NR military personnel, and we use it throughout on Rogue Squadron FAs including Celchu, Janson and Horn. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) * Joining Rogue Squadron: "the half strength Rogues soon found themselves in combat against a squadron of Imperial TIE fighters" Why were they half strength? It's never explained in the article. Add some context on this, if it's relevant/available.
 * 5) **It isn't stated why, but there are only six of them on this mission. I can ditch it if you want, but they are at half strength. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Joining Rogue Squadron: "Though Rogues Squadron successfully defeated the Imperials, Rogue Squadron pilot Wes Janson" Excessive Rogue Squadroning here. I'm guessing "Rogues Squadron" is a typo.
 * 7) **One less Rogue Squadron and yes it was. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) * Mission to Tatooine: Some context on Jabba would be nice.
 * 9) **Added. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) * The warrior princess: "Imperial blaster fire. The Rogues moved to investigate but soon found themselves under Imperial fire" Two sentences in a row ending with the word fire.
 * 11) **Changed the second. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) * The warrior princess: Make sure you introduce the abbreviation "PLB" before using it. Something like "People's Liberation Battalion (PLB)" should do the trick.
 * 13) **Probably best avoided entirely. Reworded. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) * Final mission: "Both Nep and I'ngre's became Force ghosts" The 's seems to be a typo.
 * 15) **Yup. Fixed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) *Very well written. --Imperialles 21:13, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Thanks. Green Tentacle (Talk) 21:36, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * ". . .who distinguished himself on the mission to Mrllst . . ." Should this be Mrlsst? Axinal  Convocation Chamber 21:48, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Yes it should. Changed. Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:24, April 10, 2010 (UTC)