Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/CT-327


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

CT-327

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 19:52, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A minor clone; part of my Rookies project.

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 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) *I'm seeing multiple grammatical errors throughout the article.
 * 3) *"While most clone troopers stationed on the listening post were rookies, inexperienced and younger troopers, CT-327 was given the task of guarding the base outside, while the rest of the stationed clones were inside the listening post." This jumps around from one subject to the next and reads rather confusingly.
 * 4) *"While most of the clones stationed at the station were rookies, or "shinies," inexperienced and younger troopers who were pressed into service due to the need of clones in the war, the clone troopers stationed at the Republic listening post had to watch for Confederare activity in the Outer Rim and warn the Republic fleet near Kamino of any attack." Once again, this jumps around and reads rather confusingly.
 * 5) *"As he removed his visor to check the nearby object that suddenly appeared..." What nearby object? The droid that had just popped up beside him? This series of events is confusing. Please clarify.
 * 6) *In the intro you say one of the droids shocked him, while in the bio you imply that multiple droids shocked him. Which is correct?
 * 7) *"Listening post" is repetitive in the first sentence of the P&T.
 * 8) *"After the commando droids left their boarding ships, the clone failed to destroy one of the commando droids that surprised attacked him." You make it sound as if he tried to attack them, which, IIRC, he didn't get the chance to do. Also, does this really belong in the P&T? And check your grammar, please
 * 9) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:16, November 23, 2009 (UTC)

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 * Removed per nominator's request. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:26, December 3, 2009 (UTC)