Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Verre Sydia


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Verre Sydia

 * Nominated by: Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 16:46, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part 1 of the T7-O1 conversation CANs.

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) 501st  dogma ( talk ) 15:57, August 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  01:54, September 22, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) Or you could just GAN this, since it's so close to 250 words anyway. Tinwe (comlink) 08:27, September 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) Winterz (talk) 12:20, October 6, 2012 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Stop spamming the CAN page!
 * 2) * Before I continue my review, add an intro. The article's over 200 words. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 23:31, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) **Not anymore. I lopped the last line off the BTS, as it's more about her husband and not really necessary. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 23:46, August 23, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) * The husband's article says she worked during the Galactic War. Her's does not. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 00:10, August 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 5) **BLARG. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 00:15, August 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) * What's wrong with hiring bounty hunters? How does this connect Sydia with the Empire? 501st  dogma ( talk ) 00:17, August 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 7) **The very next sentence explains what Sandafar did, my friend. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 14:13, August 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 8) Exiled Jedi
 * 9) * "As Sandafar had killed an Imperial spy by the name of Eckhorn Baliss to stop a list of Imperial traitors in the Republic from getting out, and later killed the Rodian Shafu in the same manner when the former slaver was getting close to locating the list for the Jedi Order, the duo suspected that Sydia's stance against the Empire was a cover." Please break up this sentence. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:49, August 24, 2012 (UTC)
 * 10) **Done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:12, August 25, 2012 (UTC)
 * 11) * I believe that you should mention that she had a husband before you mention that he was a spy.
 * 12) **I can't really without making the wording awkward, IMO.
 * 13) * In her husband's article you mention that in 3,663 BBY that he accessed her senate accounts. Using this information and the rough time the Jedi Knight class plays during, couldn't you provide a trameframe or times that she was a senator? (Her senator career may not have been continuous.) -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  01:28, August 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * 14) **Is that really necessary? It seems kind of reaching to me. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 07:23, September 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 15) ***I think its necessary, because from gmae we know that she was a senator and was married at that time. You might be able to rework the article to present the information in chronological order.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  00:16, September 14, 2012 (UTC)
 * 16) ****Done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 02:14, September 18, 2012 (UTC)
 * 17) * Why did you remove the part about the Hero of Tython suspecting her of being the traitor? I think you need to put that information back into the article. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  13:47, September 19, 2012 (UTC)
 * 18) **Alright, there you go. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:54, September 20, 2012 (UTC)

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