Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Hero of Tython

Hero of Tython

 * Nominated by: Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 07:23, November 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: May I present the culmination of almost eight months of work and dozens of rewrites: the Hero of Tython. This is officially the largest single article I have ever contributed, and I apologize about that in advance to all reviewers.

Support



 * 1) One of your "elite" articles, keep it up. Winterz (talk) 00:02, December 19, 2012 (UTC)

Winterz

 * Check for mentions of Warren Sedoru as a Jedi Master, a mistake you made early and might have forgotten to fix in all the spots. I've found it at least twice in the article, so there might be more.
 * None left.
 * How do you know that T-7 was the Knight's companion when he faced the Emperor? Pardon me if I missed the part :c
 * He's required&mdash;he's the only non-biological companion, so he won't be affected by the Emperor.
 * Add the explanation in the BtS section.
 * Done.
 * Like it was already mentioned, there's still too many redlinks.
 * Done.
 * I know that is isn't necessary, but there's still 2 redlinks and 1 redirect in case you want to deal with them. Winterz (talk) 19:57, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * Removed the redirect, I'll get to the redlinks in a little while.
 * I've been waiting for this for nearly 5 months. One of the Wiki's largest articles. Amazing work, Cade. Do you have your eyes on another class' project yet? Winterz (talk) 16:55, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nah, I'm gonna finish the rest of the project. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 18:40, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * IMDB as a source? I've been told that it isn't exactly reliable, so I believe you should remove it. Plus I'm sure there are other more reliable sources for that sentence. Winterz (talk) 19:57, November 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * Eh, switched to the game itself. It's in the credits. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 20:11, November 7, 2012 (UTC)

Driveby... of Tython

 * There are way too many images. In a situation like this, where there are no available images of the article's subject, it's better to use images of semi-relevant things sparingly --- it doesn't really add anything to the article to have an image of another new character every two paragraphs, especially when you consider that the article is about the Hero, not the events in which he participated. The relevance of some of the images seems like a pretty big stretch, anyway, with "Kira spent her childhood at the Sith Academy on Korriban" being the most glaring. The overabundance of images honestly detracts from the article rather than benefiting it; I think you'd be better off jettisoning a whole lot of them. Menkooroo (talk) 09:34, November 13, 2012 (UTC)
 * ... but... but.... fine. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 05:03, November 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * I think you could have a feeewwwww more than what's there now. Every two paragraphs was too much, but with the long stretches of imageless text I see now, it seems like too little. Go for a happy medium! Menkooroo (talk) 05:40, November 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * This is an ongoing process; I'll continue tonight. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg
 * Aaannd we're done! Images added. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 18:05, February 13, 2013 (UTC)

Coruscant bureaucracy

 * Preliminary objection: Some of the headings I feel are mislead. The heading "Knighthood" you may want to change to "Coruscant mission" or something similiar since that section deals with his missions on Coruscant, not his entire knighthood. Also the heading "Supreme Commander" this may be just me but I wouldn't want to confuse it with the Republic Military Supreme Commander.
 * Done.
 * I'll have more later. Coruscantfan (Talk) 02:39, February 12, 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 16:09, February 13, 2013 (UTC)
 * Can you add something under Behind the scenes, maybe under game mechanics, to the effect that for simplicity's sake you haven't added any of the hundreds of missions that the Hero can undertake on various world that are not specifically a part of the class even though they can effect storylines etc.
 * Done.
 * Training on Tython: Link for Shan's personnel chambers
 * Done.
 * Link for the ancient ruins of the J'daii Coruscantfan (Talk) 03:08, March 2, 2013 (UTC)
 * It's Kaleth, which is linked in the preceding paragraph; I simply gave more context on Kaleth by describing it that way. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 03:13, March 2, 2013 (UTC)
 * A lot of these are linking which I would do myself but I'd rather you look at them to make sure I didn't notice you linking them somewhere else and I just missed it cause I'm blind. :)
 * "Early Knighthood": Customs station can be linked to Customs Enforcement Division
 * When you discuss Carrson and her security team you can probably link that to Unidentified Coruscant Security Force agent. You can also link police officer somewhere in there.
 * Also "security forces" here can be linked to CSF, unless you want to mention that in some other way or link it to Law enforcement agency.
 * Under "The Architect of Annihilation": and leaked it to his father whose father and is there an article for the father?
 * Under "The Power Guard project": Can you vary your use of the word "but" After freeing the agents, the Knight found Chief Rieekan dead, but Special Agent Tander and Agent Diyaz were still alive—but Tander began to panic and decided to abandon the Jedi. Tander ordered Diyaz to pack up and leave, but the Knight thought quickly and gently persuaded the Twi'lek agent to stay, an action that did not pass unnoticed by Diyaz.
 * You may have already linked this somewhere but can "commandos" be linked to Republic trooper. commandos as members of Blackstar Squad, a unit from the Republic Special Forces Division
 * Under "The Death Mar": Death Mark laser is a redirect
 * Alde is also a redirect
 * More later. Good job so far, I'm impressed! Coruscantfan (Talk) 04:59, March 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * All of the above done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 05:12, March 7, 2013 (UTC)

The Floydian attack

 * I feel like the intro could be a bit longer. With such a gigantic, titanic article, you have to be leaving some useful info out.
 * Intro: "earned a loyal companion in the astromech droid T7-O1." And how did he do this?
 * A little more detail on the "Sith plot" in the intro would be appreciated.
 * Intro: Context on the Coruscant Aegis squadron. No idea what it is or who it works for.
 * Intro: "The events on Coruscant" What events?
 * Intro: "turned the entire strike team to the dark side." And how did he do this?
 * Intro: "the Hero was freed by the ghost of Master Din" Since when was Din dead?
 * Intro: Context on what the Emperor's Wrath is.
 * All of these should have been addressed in the expansion.
 * You need to link T7-O1 and "Teeseven" together in the intro. Make it clear they're the same entity.
 * I couldn't do it without making it awkward, so I kept it as only T7-O1 for the intro. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 03:58, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
 * Make sure you do it in the body then.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 03:03, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
 * Never mind, I fixed it in the intro for Teeseven.
 * Take care of these and I'll move into the body.
 * A destiny foreseen: More context is needed on the Sith Emperor and his plots.
 * "until he encountered the Jedi Knight from his vision, the Hero of Tython,[12] and began to aid the young Jedi." Doesn't really fit with the timeline.
 * Article for the shuttle he takes to Tython?
 * Article for the lake?
 * You should mention his use of a vibrosword earlier, when he first starts fighting the Flesh Raiders.
 * In the description of the fight with Callef, it's sometimes unclear which apprentice you're referring to. Try to refocus it.
 * Seeing a lot of "ing" verbs, cut down a little.
 * Why did Din send him to speak to Sumari?
 * Article for the weapons cache?
 * "At this point, the Matriarch was forced to retire because of her illness" What illness? This hasn't been mentioned before.
 * Context on Saylew.
 * Article for the surveillance devices?
 * "whose weakness he believed had allowed the Sith to win the Great War." This is the first time you've mentioned the Great War. Context.
 * " Defeating the Flesh Raiders' leader in the process" Is this the same Flesh Raider leader as before?
 * "and told the droid to send all of the information on the Forge to Teeseven right away." And what did they learn.
 * I'd like more info on the Forge - mention the whole Je'daii connection, what it was and how it was used.
 * Not seeing a change on this one.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:01, March 5, 2013 (UTC)
 * Woops. Since there's actually a question as to whether the Forge was used by the Je'daii, I simply went with "the ancient Jedi". Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 01:18, March 5, 2013 (UTC)
 * Link to his battle with Morr?
 * Also, contextify Morr as a Nautolan. You call him that without context or a link to Nautolan.
 * "misguided Nautolan" "Misguided" seems POV.
 * Would it be feasible to have an article for the Hero's lightsaber?
 * Not in my opinion, as the Hero possibly gets a second one almost right away, and they could potentially change lightsabers frequently.
 * Don't start sentences with "but". Have seen this multiple times in this section alone.
 * All of the above done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 04:54, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
 * Will continue later.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 03:03, March 4, 2013 (UTC)
 * Thar be redlinks.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:01, March 5, 2013 (UTC)
 * Handled. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 01:18, March 5, 2013 (UTC)
 * Article for the shuttle that he goes to Carrick Station in?
 * Context on the "way of the Jedi Sentinel or that of the Jedi Guardian"?
 * "and when the astromech remarked on how much Coruscant had changed, the droid told the Knight" This would make more sense if it was the Knight telling the droid the information after the astromech made the remark, or vice versa. Is this correct?
 * No, Teeseven's the one talking. Clarified.
 * "about the Sith's Sacking of Coruscant and the death of Teeseven's previous master, Jedi Master Ven Zallow." In addition, context on this stuff.
 * Gave context on the Sacking the first time it appears, when it's mentioned about Bengel Morr, but also gave context on Zallow.
 * You should probably say the Planet Prison is a superweapon right when you introduce it. For example: "his invention, a superweapon known as the Planet Prison."
 * Article for the Coruscant security network?
 * "the Knight easily defeated Garn" Is it 100% correct to say he "easily" defeated him? I may be wrong, but I imagine the difficulty would vary depending from player to player.
 * When describing Tarnis' kidnapping, you take a little while to actually identify the kidnappers as Black Sun. You should do so earlier.
 * Same paragraph: Two straight sentences with "locked in a firefight/stalemate". Vary it.
 * You say the Masters depart Coruscant, but where exactly are they going?
 * "manipulating both the Republic and Black Sun to his own ends:" And what ends were those? Yes he faked the kidnapping, but what was he doing in the first place?
 * Article for the guy who tried to shoot the Hero in the back? Is that feasible or does it change?
 * Nah, he's one of five generic NPCs who look identical.
 * You should probably identify the other two hologram Sith as Praven and Nefarid earlier than you do.
 * You should also give context as to Darth Angral's connection to the Sacking of Coruscant, to make this comment: "and—unlike the Sacking of Coruscant—there would be no mercy this time" make more sense.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 02:53, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
 * All of the above done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 03:20, March 6, 2013 (UTC)
 * "and spoke with Grand Master Shan via holocomm and General Suthra," This is kinda awkward here.
 * Wait, doesn't Carsen already have a Master? Kiwiiks, correct? Any information on why this change is made?
 * "hack into the facility's transmission." What facility? The Sith listening post? The spaceport?
 * Article for the taxi station?
 * Changed to "outskirsts of the base," as it's not exactly a true taxi station.
 * Also, article for the island?
 * "The astromech found the record of Angral's transmission to Coruscant almost immediately and was able to trace the Sith Lord's signal back to the source and recover a copy of the files that Tarnis had sent to his father." Now this is a real run-on sentence right here. Split it up or rearrange it.
 * Article for the battle in the spaceport with Ferav?
 * It and the raid on the Imperial base are both combined into the overarching Mission to Ord Mantell.
 * "haunted by strange beasts" Such as?
 * Changed to "wild," I'm not sure it's really necessary to specify the different species.
 * "that Suthra would later weaponize in the Cold War, including the Planet Prison." Didn't Tarnis do this though?
 * Can we get a link for the cloaking device the Sith were using?
 * Who exactly was Watcher One? Was he a simple agent or something more than that?
 * Article for the tracking relays, perhaps?
 * The whole deal with Watcher One and Godera in the factory needs to be made clearer. It seems that the body that the Hero finds is actually Godera's assistant, correct? There needs to be a link to that assistant, and that fact needs to be made clearer. Or, was the "assistant" that Watcher One shot the droid?  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:20, March 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * All of the above done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 03:06, March 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * "Suthra then warned the Jedi about the project itself," Wait, what project? You never said they were gonna deal with a project.
 * "After the Treaty," You should probably clarify what treaty this was.
 * Your capitalization of the "project" in "Power Guard Project" is not consistent.
 * "but the whole area had become hostile to outsiders in the last few days" How so?
 * "who was concerned that the Imperials had made them:" Made them what?
 * Also, context on omega alert.
 * "he congratulated the Jedi on the defeat of Ferav and Watcher One, and that he had been waiting for the Knight" He congratulated the Jedi that he had been waiting for the Knight?
 * You describe Galen asking the Hero to kill him twice, which is unnecessary.
 * It's because he asks the Hero to do it twice.
 * Context on death mark.
 * "Game-changing" seems pretty colloquial.
 * Article for the Imperial ship?
 * Context on the Sith Emperor. Also, he goes unlinked.
 * He's already been linked and given context at the top of the article.
 * Riiiiiiiight... my bad.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:07, March 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * Link for the duel with Valis?
 * It's linked in the Main template.
 * Context on the First Son. Any distinction from a normal Child?  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:58, March 8, 2013 (UTC)
 * All done.
 * "Carsen seemed very concerned about her master's failure to report back in," But Kiwiiks isn't her Master anymore, correct? The Hero is.
 * "the trio landed their craft at the spaceport in Anchorhead," The trio? The Hero, Carsen and who?
 * Article for the mountains where the Tatooine facility was located?
 * "The only things he did attack were Brrik's droids, telling the scientist that they were no threat and did not deserve to die." From the way this sentence is worded, it seems the antecedent of "they" is Brrik's droids. I assume this is not the case.
 * "The Knight successfully defeated Praven in combat" I feel like the "successfully" is unnecessary here.
 * "so that Angral would spare him further humility," Spared further humility? Do you mean "further humiliation"?
 * "Praven then informed his enemy that his honor demanded that the Sith surrender to Angral," Wait, Praven would surrender to Angral? Not the Hero? I'm not exactly following this.
 * Clarified.
 * "One of the founding worlds of the Republic, Alderaan had been embroiled in a brutal civil war for much of the past decade over which noble house would take the throne, and the Republic was backing House Organa in opposition to both the Imperial-sponsored House Thul and the independent House Ulgo, whose leader Bouris Ulgo—a former Republic general—had declared himself king not long after the last queen's death in the early days of the Cold War." This is a looooooooooooong sentence. Split it up.
 * Article for the holorelays, perhaps?
 * I think you should identify the research facility as the Mensaav Laboratory right when you introduce it.
 * "The Mirialan had given Nefarid's forces the lab's location," Nefarid? When did he come into play? Is this when they learned he was involved? If so, that should be changed.
 * "Nefarid contacted the Jedi several times and taunted his opponent," And how exactly did he do this?
 * I'm seeing you call Aleyna Hark by her first name. This is a no-no.
 * Could we get an article for the Din-Angral battle? It seems that there was a duel of some sort.
 * "Nefarid allowed his Force cloak to fade" Could you possibly mention this earlier, perhaps as the reason he was in the shadows?  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:07, March 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * All done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 02:29, March 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * Seeing some contractions in your writing. Remove these, they aren't encyclopedic tone.
 * "He had planted a tracker aboard the Oppressor at the cost of his own life" How is this particular action "at the cost of his own life"? Was he killed while doing this? Was he on the ship for that particular purpose?
 * "Carsen believed that Angral could only do so much damage to the planet with one ship, but Godera countered her by reminding everyone of Taris" This requires some additional context, since you don't mention previously anywhere that the devastation of Taris was by just one ship.
 * Specified about the Leviathan.
 * "a reminder that proved correct when the Knight arrived in-system, as Uphrades had been devastated." Could we get just a touch of info on exactly what was done to the planet, if possible?
 * Gave it further context, but it's not explained in-game until Godera discusses the Desolator during that conversation.
 * Is an article for the Sith assassin who holds the Daybreaker command crew hostage possible, or is he just a random NPC?
 * Same thing for the Sith apprentice that attacks them on the Oppressor in the Showdown section.
 * Both are random.
 * "dispatched boarding pods to eliminate them, and Captain Dal was confident that there were no survivors." No survivors from the boarding pods? It's unclear.
 * You should identify Senessa as a Mirialan when you first introduce her.
 * "The Mon Calamari began preparations for food rationing on the capital after learning of what had transpired on the Daybreaker," After learning what had transpired on the Daybreaker, not what happened to Uphrades?
 * "Angral had departed Uphrades so quickly because he had already chosen a new target." Make it completely clear that this "new target" is Tython.
 * Is it possible to link to the reactor relays?
 * Eh, they're really just reactors.
 * When Carsen is possessed by the Emperor, it might be beneficial to remind the reader that this is a result of her being a Child of the Emperor, instead of in the next paragraph.
 * "Released from the Emperor's will briefly," Any reason why this came about?
 * It's just how the cinematic plays out.
 * "Angral reminded her of her role as a Child of the Emperor" And what exactly is that role?
 * Changed to heritage, it was my attempt to explain why she was possessed.
 * "and that he would not allow those futures to come to pass." What futures?
 * No idea, it's just what the Emperor says.
 * Wouldn't it just be better to just refer to the Hero of Tython as the "Hero" after he receives that title? It could help avoid any confusion that comes with just calling him the "Knight", especially in situations where other Jedi Knights are involved.
 * I use Knight and Jedi to vary up the wording. Would it be better if I used "Hero" every time (or almost every time?)
 * I would say so. Considering that he comes into contact with many Jedi over the ensuing events, it would be best to try and clear up any potential confusion.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 23:47, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
 * Link for the Lower Industrial Sector?
 * Already linked in the Nar Shaddaa section.
 * My bad, must have missed it.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 23:47, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
 * Will continue soon.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:55, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
 * All done.
 * Article for the ship that crashed on Tatooine?
 * "Din's spirit instructed his former student to travel to Tatooine, where a ship had crashed in the desert," So does Din order the Hero to investigate this or something? The way this is worded the two seem unrelated.
 * I think a little more context on the whole crashed ship deal is needed. Who was he taking the logs to and what exactly happened? Do we know?
 * Article for Bugtown?
 * In the last couple sentences of Battlefields of Balmorra's first paragraph, you use "facility" four times. Vary up the word choice.
 * Could there be an article for the Imperial computer network on Balmorra?
 * There's not really enough information on it, or really a need for one, in my opinion.
 * "as a result of the decade-long occupation," Decade-long? Earlier you say they had been holding out against the Imperials for over thirty years.
 * Typo.
 * Article for Gorinth Outpost?
 * Could we perhaps get a link for the Imperial capture of Camp Conquest?
 * Eh, that's really a part of the larger Battle of Balmorra, so I'm not sure it needs its own article.
 * I'm assuming the Imperial commander of Camp Conquest is just a random NPC, correct?
 * Article for Remmy?
 * Also, some context on how Remmy knows Doc, since you say he was "surprised to see" Doc. More to come soon.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 23:47, March 19, 2013 (UTC)
 * All done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 00:55, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
 * "The Kel Dor asked the Hero and company to find and help Sajar, as the military base would fall without Jedi aid, and the Hero received another visit from Master Din's ghost warning the Knight to aid Sajar just before the group set off for the planet." Don't like the flow of this sentence, I think these thoughts should be brought up separately.
 * "was guarding a Republic military base on Quesh," You should conclusively identify this as the Adrenal Research Facility the first time you mention it.
 * Article for the Imperial officer who recognized Sajar? Doesn't seem like he actually appears, so I bet one is possible.
 * "while the Knight defended the facility's entrance with the Republic defenders." Defended with defenders, try to vary up the word choice.
 * The Emperor's Wrath is Scourge, correct? Identify him as such. Although the Hero might not know him, he's already been introduced, and revealed as the Emperor's Wrath, earlier in the article.
 * "The strike team's target on the planet was the ship of an Imperial scientist" Link for this ship?
 * Article for the SIS raid on the Nar Shaddaa intelligence base... and perhaps the base itself?
 * "an abandoned outpost that used to belong to the Ortolan species." It just belonged to the species itself? Was it a colony of some sort?
 * Link for the forward outpost that Narezz defends?
 * What exactly is Grossh's role? Is he some sort of chief?
 * No idea, I think he's just a lieutenant or something, but I'm not sure.
 * "The White Maw pirates had made a base in a spire in the middle of the trench," Is this the same as the Firefrost place? If it is, identify it as such. If not, new link.
 * "Sergeant Rusk had made it out alive as well&, with his squad intact." Were you going to put an "and" here, or is this just a typo?
 * Will continue tomorrow.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:55, March 24, 2013 (UTC)
 * All done.

Comments

 * There's too many redlinks! KILL. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 12:35, November 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * I don't feel this warrants an objection, but i think it would be good if the class images from the SWTOR website were used in the Bts, maybe even as a small gallery or something.  Commander Code-8  To say hi, press 42 09:43, November 6, 2012 (UTC)
 * "The Hero of Tython was a powerful Jedi Knight". Isn't that a POV? Powerful in relation to what? Says who?  Stake black   msg 17:26, January 17, 2013 (UTC)
 * Nope. Almost everyone in the game says the Hero's incredibly powerful (including the Emperor), and the OOU Encyclopedia calls them one of the most powerful Jedi seen in generations. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:30, January 17, 2013 (UTC)
 * The fact that everyone says it is still POV, though. A good compromise would be something along the lines of "widely regarded as one of the most powerful Jedi seen in generations".  Stake black   msg 17:34, January 17, 2013 (UTC)
 * It's not POV if the out-of-universe book calls them a powerful Jedi - and it's not just Jedi who say the Hero's powerful, the Emperor himself (the Knight's mortal enemy) calls the Jedi incredibly powerful. POV is for when there's only one side of the argument. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:38, January 17, 2013 (UTC)
 * Stake has a point Cade. Just saying the he was powerful is POV. You must say something like "considered by many as a very powerful Jedi" or something within those lines. Winterz (talk) 17:29, March 13, 2013 (UTC)
 * Again, no, I don't. The Encyclopedia says they're powerful, and as long as we have the outdated but sourced statement that Palpatine is the most powerful Sith Lord, there's no grounds for removing an OOU statement. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 17:50, March 13, 2013 (UTC)

Notes from MJ
I was asked to copy-edit this three months ago and am just now getting to it. I will leave myself notes here regularly to keep track of where I last stopped and may also use this section to ask Cade questions if needed. Actual objections, if any, will be placed in the proper section above.
 * Cade: please check that I correctly interpreted the last sentence of the intro. I slightly rephrased it to avoid the implication that the awards were themselves "despite the Emperor's power", but I'm unsure if the awards were for defeating him or for action in general over the course of the war.
 * No, that's fine. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 01:40, November 26, 2012 (UTC)
 * Continue from Hero of Tython. &mdash;MJ&mdash; Training Room 05:07, November 25, 2012 (UTC)
 * Your "M" key stutters. :P
 * On a more serious note, I'm not finding much to change so far.
 * Continue from Hero_of_Tython. &mdash;MJ&mdash; Training Room 04:27, November 27, 2012 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure what this is supposed to mean (under "Ord Mantell"): "travel to either Taris and Nar Shaddaa". It should be either "both Taris and Nar Shaddaa" or "either Taris or Nar Shaddaa", but combining "either" with "and" doesn't work. Which is it?
 * Should be "both". Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 04:19, November 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * Continue from Hero_of_Tython. &mdash;MJ&mdash; Council Chambers 04:16, November 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * Continue from Hero_of_Tython . &mdash;MJ&mdash; Jedi Council Chambers 04:43, December 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * The quote under "Holocaust" sounds like it's missing a word: "The Emperor has only true goal"
 * Fixed.
 * Link stuff: I removed the link to Before the Republic era because that's an OOU publishing era, not an IU era, and thus shouldn't be linked to outside the BTS. Also, I changed the Executor (Imperial rank) link to Executor (Sith rank), as the former is specifically part of Palpatine's Empire and the two should be kept separate.
 * Alright, I'll create that soon.
 * Continue from Hero_of_Tython. &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Training Room</b> 03:24, December 8, 2012 (UTC)
 * Please double-check my comments from the last session.
 * Under "Relationships" → "Fideltin Rusk", check for a missing word here: "He also believed that the Jedi Code was something that greatly improve the Republic military."
 * Fixed.
 * In the BTS, I removed the reference to Forum:CT:TOR and video game canon. It's not necessary to source a statement that the article makes a certain arbitrary assumption, and the link violates Avoid self-references, specifically the section on "Community and website feature references".
 * Alright.
 * Also in the BTS, I would suggest finding new references to replace both of the ones in the second paragraph under "Name and identity". The ones there now violate the rule that Wookieepedia is not a source. Something from the official TOR website would be ideal.
 * Done.
 * And I'm done. Good thing I have no intentions of ever playing TOR, as I'm thoroughly spoiled on the Knight class story now. :P &mdash;MJ&mdash;</b> Comlink</b> 03:52, December 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 20:51, December 27, 2012 (UTC)