Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Trinnolt Makken


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Trinnolt Makken

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jujiggum ) 00:15, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Fairly short Outcast nom; approx. 350 words as of the nomination

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 01:33, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:25, 6 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:47, 6 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:31, 9 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Master JonathanJedi Council Chambers 04:32, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) "stating that just because someone held a set of skills did not mean that they required a supervisor": can be worded less colloquially. If "someone" is going to be used, the "they" needs to be "he or she", but I recommend replacing "someone" and talking from a more general point of view, such as "possession of skills did not constitute [blah blah blah]". Other than that, it's fine. I almost thought he was another Hidden One when I saw the thing go up on my watchlist. :P  CC7567  (talk) 00:31, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *lol no worries, I'm a man of my word, no more Hidden Ones :). Reworded, thanks for the review! Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jujiggum ) 01:09, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Soresu
 * 4) * He retired from service by the year of 43 ABY, during which he was appointed by the Galactic Federation of Free Alliances to be the Jedi supervisor of former Jedi Knight Tahiri Veila. "During which" seems like it referring to "by the year of 43 BBY" ie. he was appointed before that time. Please reword for clarity. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:51, 6 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Reworded. Thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jujiggum ) 13:56, 6 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa:
 * 7) * Can we do a little bit here to explain the implications of this and why this is bad for Veila? i.e., he shadows her around, etc.: "when he was appointed by the Galactic Federation of Free Alliances to be the Jedi supervisor of former Jedi Knight Tahiri Veila. As she was no longer a Jedi, Veila resisted and took the matter to court."
 * 8) **Done.
 * 9) * Same thing here. Please describe the implications of what him being her supervisor means: "he was appointed by the Galactic Federation of Free Alliances to be the Jedi supervisor of former Jedi Tahiri Veila." Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:09, 8 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) **Done. Thanks for the review. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jujiggum ) 22:57, 8 June 2009 (UTC)

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