Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Crueya Vandron


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Crueya Vandron

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:18, 15 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guaranteed to bore.

(5 Inqs/0 User/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Greejy! Thefourdotelipsis 00:18, 22 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:30, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman ( Talk ) 15:08, 28 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 13:38, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:47, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * This "Justice" links to some bounty hunter. Can we link to something appropriate? "met with stern opposition by the Justice department."
 * 3) **Linked to something more appropriate.
 * 4) * You never really say what they decided upon, just that they discussed and he agreed on something. Please specify/clarify: "Vandron corresponded with Ishin Il-Raz, head of COMPNOR's Select Committee, as to what path the organization would take; Vandron approved,"
 * 5) **We don't know what they agreed on, as the info comes from statements from Il-Raz to the media.
 * 6) * The way this reads makes it sound as though the entire effort was a failure just because one person dropped out and joined the enemy. Was this necessarily so? Other students may have proven to be great successes, for example: "Vandron's idea ultimately backfired, as one of the children, Kerri Lessev, became a top agent of the Alliance to Restore the Republic" Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:58, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **Altered it a bit; does that look okay? Thanks for the review, -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:21, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Yes, sir. Good job overall. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:30, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 10) * A variety of terms instead of "organization" would be lovely in the 3rd para of new order.
 * 11) * "Military operations, bureaucracy, and Intelligence being the foremost subjects on the curriculum. " Fragment.
 * 12) * "yes-men" is too informal. I'm not sure what to reword this to, but please do so.
 * 13) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:25, 30 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) **Should be all fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:07, 2 July 2008 (UTC)

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