Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Darth Vectivus (second nomination)

Darth Vectivus

 * Nominated by: —Tommy 9281 00:43, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yet another notable occasion on the calendar of dread.

Support

 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:53, May 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Great job, Tommy.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:38, May 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) This is the Uncle Buck of Sith Lords. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 01:52, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Lazy Felix the Sith Lord! Thefourdotelipsis 04:43, June 1, 2010 (UTC)

NaruHina

 * "Vectivus's Force phantom technique was coveted by the Korriban Sith despite their contempt for him." I'm not sure why this is in the P&T, it seems out of place, especially since it's in the P&A with much more detail.
 * Addressed.
 * "CSWE also states that Lumiya met Vectivus' spirit at The Home millennia after his death&hellip;he died centuries prior&hellip;" I don't think this is technically a contradiction. "Centuries" and "Millennia" can potentially mean the same thing.
 * I hear you, but it is still a note of confusion. I'd rather point out the contradiction instead of leaving the reader to interpret the terms as sort-of interchangeable. Let me know if you really feel it necessary for me to remove it, and I'll do so.
 * No, it's fine. It's better to ask the question than say nothing at all. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:19, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll continue this either in a few hours or tomorrow. RLI. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:41, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll be waiting ;) —Tommy 9281 00:51, May 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * "&hellip;lingered in the labyrinthine mines underneath the Home, where in life he had once resided." Work in that the Jonex Mine was in the Home.
 * Addressed.
 * "&hellip;began to behave similarly to the extinct species that preceded them." What extinct species?
 * Addressed.
 * That's it. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:19, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, Naru. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy 9281 00:25, May 13, 2010 (UTC)

Chack Jadson
Quote, not dialogue, for P&T.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:27, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * I think you meant P&A ;). Either way, it's been addressed. —Tommy 9281 00:37, May 13, 2010 (UTC)

Xd1358
Could you cut down on the intro a bit? It is very long compared to the body. -- 1358  (Talk) 17:15, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * Really? I don't think it is. Everything that's said there needs to be said. I would ask that you please reconsider your position. —Tommy 9281 18:23, May 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * Fair enough. -- 1358  (Talk) 18:28, May 13, 2010 (UTC)

Imperialles
Per WP:LG, please provide the subject's name in bold in the intro. --Imperialles 08:46, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * It already was, but for my own future reference, where does it say that in the LG? I looked for that and couldn't find it. —Tommy 9281 12:11, May 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * My bad. Chalk it up to a needlessly high desktop resolution. The bolding thing is mentioned here. --Imperialles 22:44, May 15, 2010 (UTC)

Grunny:

 * Apostrophe consistency. Make a decision whether to use Vectivus' or Vectivus's. Both are correct but it's better to be consistent.
 * Addressed.
 * Likewise you're inconsistent in capitalization of "the Home" versus "The Home." Whichever is used in the sources should be applied throughout.
 * Addressed.
 * I'll read through it fully soon. Grunny  ( talk ) 00:07, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you sir;) —Tommy 9281 15:50, May 17, 2010 (UTC)

Cec Linder!

 * For the purposes of an introduction, there's perhaps a bit too much detail about the apparition to Nelani in the intro.
 * "During his early years, this Human male lived a normal life into adulthood" - Which? Tense needs checking there. And I think it's in the intro as well.
 * There's a bit too much detail on Rar's movements that aren't directly relevant to Vectivus, nor do we require that context.
 * This also goes for the movements of the Sith. The article starts to become about Vectivus's asteroid, rather than the character himself.
 * Otherwise excellent. Thefourdotelipsis 11:14, May 29, 2010 (UTC)

Farlstendoiro

 * "the current Dark Lady of the Sith". I dislike the use of the word current, when we are using past tense under the premise of "A long time ago".
 * "a decadent mansion". NPOV?
 * Section 'Sith Master', last paragraph, is not chronologically ordered: He died there, but before his death he had built a holocron. You should mention that he built the holocron, and then he died.
 * The quote for "Conversations with Nelani Dinn" is attributed to Vectivus and Dinn, but I think the first line is uttered by Dinn. Could you reword the atrtrbution?
 * Good article on Darth Autobus! Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:42, June 1, 2010 (UTC)