Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Battle of unidentified planet (tactical droid)


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Battle of unidentified planet (tactical droid)
> QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:18, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nominated by: <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Nomination comments: What can I say? I'm really getting into this...

(4 ACs/4 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:00, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:30, 28 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Looking good.--Kreivi Wolter 14:59, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Why not? Looks good. -Gmalek 19:27, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 19:55, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 02:18, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:15, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 8)  Graestan ( Talk ) 17:24, 24 August 2009 (UTC)

Object > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:19, 27 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 16:44, 26 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:19, 27 July 2009 (UTC) > QuiGonJinn (Talk) 11:19, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * The intro needs to contain more about the actual battle. ATM, its sounding like the tactical droid was alone, since you make no mention of the other droids.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Could the image caption be changed? It should describe what's happening in the picture. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:47, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) * The BTS could be expanded (mention which episode this led into, etc.)
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Please make an Aftermath section. (This led into an epsiode, so I still believe you could have farily significant information there).
 * 5) **The problem is that events in the episode do not have any relation to this battle. Despite what our Battle of Quell artice claims, there is no evidence in the episode that Aayla's ship was attacked while she returned from this battle. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) ***Fair enough. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:46, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) * Also, there is info that is currently only present in the intro: "...during the Clone Wars between the Galactic Republic and the Confederacy of Independent Systems." You should either remove the "between the Republic and Confedercy" part, or move it down to the bio as well. (Right now, the bio doesn't state that the War was between the Republic and Confederacy).
 * 3) **I decided to remove it from the intro.
 * 4) *Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:14, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for review. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Attack of the Clone
 * 2) * I understand your reasoning that we don't know what happened between this battle and Quell, but if the infobox claims that the Battle of Quell is next, then there needs to be a better flow of events. If not, and especially per the TCW web comic&mdash;the majority of the other comics say that they take place "just before" the corresponding episodes, while this one is notably one of the few that does not and states "The events in this story occur some time before  ' Jedi Crash'"&mdash;then perhaps we can't assume the chronology as you're saying.
 * 3) **Point taken and the Battle of Quell is removed from the infobox. Using the same logic, I figured out that we can't say that Mission to Florrum occurred prior to this one, so I've removed Florrum as well.
 * 4) * Please be careful what you assume for the Prelude. All we know is that a trap was set, and I don't see anything to indicate that the tactical droid and its forces were on the planet before Secura lured it to the planet's data banks. The current wording&mdash;"a Confederate tactical droid that commanded the Separatist forces on an unidentified planet"&mdash;suggests otherwise.  CC7567  (talk) 18:45, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Before I'll even look at this: don't use OOU terms like "unidentified" in the IU articles, please.  Graestan ( Talk ) 16:20, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Fixed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:08, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Attack of the Clone II
 * 4) * Per Rule 8, please take care of that intro redlink that I added.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Are you sure that Galle and Barr were lieutenants at the time? I'm quite certain Reversal of Fortune took place after Headgames, which is where they supposedly first appeared as lieutenants.  CC7567  (talk) 22:40, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Fair enough. Fixed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:35, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 9) * Intro wording is very vague about the trap and what the appeal would be. Please spare me link-jumping and spell it out a bit more explicitly.
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) * Ditto for the bio&mdash;still having to speculate on my own about what the information bunker would be useful for. I mean, it's kind of obvious, but it's still the sort of thing we should spell out.
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * Brief context for "cyberostasis," which as a word sounds like it wouldn't actual destroy the files.
 * 14) **Addressed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:50, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) * Graestan ( Talk ) 01:20, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments

> QuiGonJinn (Talk) 12:18, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Because they would have only a couple of lines, I decided not to use the "prelude" and "aftermath" sections and instead merged everything into "the battle". <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * I'll take another look when I can get to it.  CC7567  (talk) 05:34, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Should the Jedi Order be mentoned in infobox?--Kreivi Wolter 23:56, 2 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Not necessarily. Although Aayla is a Jedi, she acted on behalf of the Republic, and listing the Jedi Order seems redundant. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:35, 4 August 2009 (UTC)