Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Battle of Bothawui (Clone Wars)


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Battle of Bothawui (Clone Wars)

 * Nominated by:  CC7567  (talk) 00:46, 8 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The last of the horrendous CloneProject named Droid Retrieval. Again, the prelude is personally longer than my liking.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1) ShaakTi1138 07:45, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) All of CC's noms are clean. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:13, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:00, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:29, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) CC is good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:29, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 07:54, 24 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * I suspect this may just be a punctuation error, but this sentence isn't reading right, specifically the last clause. Please revise: "Skywalker was accompanied by his Padawan, Jedi Commander Ahsoka Tano, and assigned a unit of clone troopers under the command of Clone Captain CC-7567, Skywalker's fleet departed Coruscant." Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:22, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Eww...I should have fixed that earlier. Addressed, and thanks, Tope.  CC7567  (talk) 01:54, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 5) * The opening quote would make more sense if the attribution was rewritten to put Kenobi's name first.
 * 6) **Addressed.
 * 7) * A very brief bit of explanation for how they learned of Grievous's plan would help in prelude. If it's worth quoting, it's worth explaining. :P
 * 8) **Eh, fine. :P Although I really want to avoid the crap from Wild Space as much as possible.
 * 9) * Failing being mentioned in the above, Kenobi needs context and a link in the last paragraph of prelude.
 * 10) **Oops. Got that.
 * 11) *That's all folks. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:32, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **Thanks, GT. :)  CC7567  (talk) 18:43, 14 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) I'll review in depth later, but just as a suggestion: If you want to cut down your prelude, you could remove a header and a quote and combine the two sections, as there's only two somewhat small paragraphs in each. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 07:57, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I considered it and took your suggestion; it looks a bit better. (And shorter. :P)  CC7567  (talk) 20:39, 11 June 2009 (UTC)