Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Bormus Testing Facility


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Bormus Testing Facility

 * Nominated by: Kilsone Likes PIE 6:40, 24 June 09 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Goes along with my Procedure nom and Jon's Gran worker nom.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:50, 2 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:46, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 18:47, 4 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Graestan ( Talk ) 00:52, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:53, 14 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Punctuation missing on lead quote.
 * 3) * Linking in quote captions is missing.
 * 4) * However, when his request was shot down because the fighters need at least another three weeks of testing. However, Skywalker decided to personally travel to the Bromus Testing Facility Using the word "when" implies a later event. I would be easiest to just connect it onto the next sentence by removing the However in between, which is repetitive anyway.
 * 5) ** There are still two howevers. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:46, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***I have now, however, addressed this. :P Kilson Likes PIE 17:06, 02 July 09 (UTC)
 * 7) * Could the caption for the image be a little more descriptive?
 * 8) * However, his request was shot down, because the Y-wings required least another three weeks of feild-tesing. However, Skywalker decided to acquire the Y-wings himself. However is repetitive.
 * 9) * However, Broadside and Matchstick argued that since they have a Jedi with them that outranked the guards, they should be allowed past. Meanwhile, the R2-D2 gave the Gran worker falsified documents saying Skywalker can take the Y-wings. However, Not in past tense. Again, however is too excessively used.
 * 10) **Addressed, thank you for the review. Kilson Likes PIE 12:17, 25 June 09 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Just one left. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:46, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) The Grand Master
 * 13) * Actually, you're not supposed to link quote captions unless that is the only spot in the article in which the linked words appear.
 * 14) * The first sentence should be reworded; right now it's not clear as to whether the station or the planet is run by Koensayr.
 * 15) * As I recall, it was Senator Aak, not Palpatine, who had to give perimission for the fighters to be used.
 * 16) **You're right, but Skywalker asked both for some reason.
 * 17) * I believe "his clone troopers" were Blue Squadron. They should probably be linked in the intro, and later, when you say "his troops", you should probably say "his pilots", to be more accurate.
 * 18) **Shadow squadron, and I put it in. :P
 * 19) * The first sentence of the Characteristics should be reworded; unclear whether the station or Koensayr itself orbited the planet. (Once again, I know what you mean, but what you have is grammatically incorrect)
 * 20) * "The Bormus Testing Facility had a Gran working there" This is awkward, please reword.
 * 21) * "Pablo Hidalgo, the writer of Procedure, intended in the comic that the Grans working in the Bormus Testing Facility were to show that Senator Ask Aak was putting his friends into places of influence." This is also phrased awkwardly, please reword.
 * 22) **I'm not really sure how that's phrased akwardly, but I did try to shorten it a bit.
 * 23) *I've changed all these, but as a note, remember that clone trooper is two words, not one. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:04, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) **Everything else is addressed, thanks, again, for the review dude. Kilson Likes PIE 17:14, 02 July 09 (UTC)
 * 25) Attack of the Clone
 * 26) *I've fixed both of these for you, but please remember to use Ref tags in the infobox, as well as the fact that all dates in the series are "c. 22 BBY" and referenced to the TCW novel.
 * 27) * "However, Skywalker's request was shot down": too colloquial and unspecific; please reword.
 * 28) **OK, addressed. Kilson Likes PIE 18:12, 04 July 09 (UTC)
 * 29) *Fine otherwise.  CC7567  (talk) 23:59, 2 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just as a note, you should probably make a stub for hangar 8122, especially since it a appears in the infobox. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:50, 2 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Yes, even though this isn't backed up by GAN requirements, I would highly recommend making at least an article stub for it; a redlink simply doesn't look nice in the infobox.  CC7567  (talk) 23:59, 2 July 2009 (UTC)
 * I made a small article. Kilson Likes PIE 18:12, 04 July 09 (UTC)
 * Please watch how you link things; linking the "who worked" in "a Gran who worked at the facility" doesn't make sense. It has to link the whole subject, meaning that the link would end at "facility" in this case.  CC7567  (talk) 23:59, 2 July 2009 (UTC)