Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jaxxon


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Jaxxon

 * Nominated by: Cull Tremayne 04:43, 1 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The Big Green Bunny himself.

(5 Inq/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Great work. --Squishy Vic (discussion) (contributions) 06:14, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) BUNNY! Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:53, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) The character is a joke. But the article is good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:12, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:35, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Holy Hutch, Batman!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 20:10, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Wascally wabbit. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:33, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) I'm surprised nobody has made the "Action Jaxxon" joke yet. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:18, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From Toprawa's Swinging Hammer of No Mercy:
 * 2) * You called it a village here, but in the next sentence it's a city? I don't think the two are equable: "After defending the city from Cloud-Riders"
 * 3) **Good point, reworded to remove mention of "city" when referring to the village of Onacra. Cull Tremayne 06:47, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * This speculation here -- "apparently under the manipulation of the Old One" -- attached to this -- "Whether because they were a much smaller force, or because the Old One was controlling it," -- concerning whether or not the Old Man was in control of it needs to go, please. Unless you can reword it to say that a character suspected the Old Man was in control?
 * 5) **This is connected to the previous objection: "apparently manipulating the Behemoth's actions."
 * 6) ***The problem here is that the omniscient narrator in these comics makes similar claims. So I know it looks like OR, speculation on my part, but it's how the narrator describes the situation occuring, with the Behemoth's motives and actions uncertain. So, there really is no way to clarify it with a "he said" clause, since it's not really a "character" who makes the claims about who is really controlling the monster.
 * 7) * The final paragraph of the "Battle with a monster" section, specifically the text after the sentence beginning "Wielding his lightsaber," gets kind of play-by-playish and has little to do with Jaxxon himself. Please cut out the fat and condense it into a few sentences to say that Jaxxon's friends defeated the beast.
 * 8) **Trimmed a bit, removed most of the details that didn't involve Jaxxon. Kept in "how" the beast was defeated though, since it seemed relevant to the attack that Jaxxon was involved in.
 * 9) * Per our Quote CT/quote "policy," I believe the quote heading the "Back to Aduba-3" section should be in quote format, not dialogue
 * 10) **Changed.
 * 11) * Please remove speculation: "perhaps denoting some sort religious beliefs."
 * 12) **Gone.
 * 13) * Ditto: "perhaps denoting something more than simple business partners."
 * 14) **Reworded.
 * 15) *You've outdone yourself in this BTS. Excellent as usual. I expected nothing less from you, Cull. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:04, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) **Thanks for the review. :D Cull Tremayne 06:47, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) Shouldn't he have a relationships section? --Eyrezer 10:32, 23 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *Is that a requirement? I only ask because we don't really know of any "relationships" that he had. At least not in the way we use that term. He wasn't officially dating Amaiza after all. Besides that section would just be a repeat of the end of the P&T wouldn't it? Cull Tremayne 22:36, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

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