Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tarr Seirr


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Tarr Seirr

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 16:14, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Lets try this out.

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good now! :) Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:47, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Oll Korrect! ~ SavageBob 19:21, December 9, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) *Please check your grammar throughout the article.
 * 3) *Missing P&a section.
 * 4) **Yeah, actually I tried to write that, but it was awfully short. There really isn't much fact to put on that.--Kreivi Wolter 20:30, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ***The section is required by the LG. If there's anything that can be put there, it should be there. His Force-sensitvity and any particular Force Powers that he exhibited, the fact that he was skilled enough to became a Knight, his skill with a lightsaber, and any other skills he may have possessed can and should be mentioned here. Even if the secion is very small, it is required.
 * 6) ****Good now?--Kreivi Wolter 21:58, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *****Please check your grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:39, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:01, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Skippy vs the Cerean guy
 * 10) * Early life: During the growing Separatist Crisis, members of the Council found themselves too occupied, and Mundi relinquished his position as Watchman to Seirr, who had also became a Jedi Knight. This part could be improved using a chronological order: Seirr became a Knight; then Separatist Crisis; then Mundi relinquished Watchmanship, then Seirr is promoted to Watchman.
 * 11) **Good now? Kreivi Wolter 15:40, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * Attack on Hypori: General Daakman Barrek uncovered Add more context: Mention that Barrek was a Jedi, or the reader could assume that Barrek was Separatist.
 * 13) **Good now? Kreivi Wolter 15:40, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * Final duel: Are you sure K'Kruhk was a Jedi Master at this point? Because I am not so sure at all. Can you source that particular word, or remove it?
 * 15) **Good now? Kreivi Wolter 15:40, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:35, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 18) * I'm pretty sure nothing should be linked in quotes unless such links are not repeated in the article proper. More to come, but looks good. ~ SavageBob 07:01, December 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 09:08, December 8, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * If someone knows the source that identifes him as general, then please tell me.Kreivi Wolter 20:30, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * And if someone knows which source first identifies him as Tarr Seirr, please tell that one too. Im not sure is it his Databank entry. Kreivi Wolter 13:11, November 29, 2009 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

 * 1) Unaddressed objections for 3 weeks.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:05, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  CC7567  (talk) 18:23, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:37, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 19:58, December 20, 2009 (UTC)