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(1 Inq/1 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Major issues listed here have been addressed. Yrfeloran 06:16, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Could still transition better, but nicely done. I'm confident that other reviews will improve this prose further.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:02, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *You've done a nice job, Yrfeloran, making some major additions to this article. Unfortunately, it's still quite a ways away from being up to FA standards. Without even reading through, I pick up on the following problems:
 * 3) * The infobox must be completely sourced, as does the succession box at the bottom of the page.
 * 4) **Done. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Complete sourcing includes sourcing the "Era(s)" field. I've done this for you, but please source this next time. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:44, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Any quotes within the article must go at the beginning of sections, after the subhead, not in the middle of paragraphs.
 * 7) **Most of those were residual old paragraphs - done. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *The entire article is little more than 1-2 sentence paragraphs summarizing events. While I'm certainly not a huge prequel trilogy fan, having never read the majority of these sources, this tells me that you've done just that, quickly generalizing important topics while skipping out on juicy details. Featured Articles must be comprehensive, not only including material from all relevant sources, but also detailing that information to a great degree. An article like Dooku, for as much information is out there on him, should have dozens of paragraphs several sentences in length. It's just too thin right now. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:50, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ** There was a formatting issue with some prior authors' styles, which I've now fixed. It now "looks better". As for actual content, there have been significant expansions and section mergings. Dooku's article over the period of the movies was probably more in-depth than recently re-FAd Grievous, for instance, even before I revamped it. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) LtNOWIS
 * 11) * Image:Quarren league.jpg, Image:DookuVSGrievous.jpg, and Image:DookuBTS.jpg need more specific sources. The Clone Wars shots need to specify which episodes, and the databank shot needs a link to the page it's from. -LtNOWIS 10:19, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Muuuuuurgh helped with this. Thanks, Muuuuuurgh! Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 14) * Needs a longer and more comprehensive intro.
 * 15) ** Intro has been expanded somewhat. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * I won't get specific, but it's way too light on detail. Most of the article is just short paragraph, then a new section.
 * 17) *This can be brought to FA, but it will take a lot of time and commitment. If you can do it, I commend you.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:30, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) More stuff from me:
 * 19) * Both Sith Apprentice and Leaving the Order have paragrpahs that are no more than one or two sentences. Combine sentences in those sections or expand them.
 * 20) **Combination and expansion done Yrfeloran 06:34, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Combine the sections Jedi confrontation and successful escape.
 * 22) **Done Yrfeloran 06:34, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * You link way too much. Link onc ein the intro and then once in the body.
 * 24) **This was kind of inevitable, since the original article was overlinked and additions were made piecemeal. I think I've pruned about all of them Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) * De-link the quote in Endgame.
 * 26) **Done Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Remove the sentence about Quinlan Vos in the Legacy section.
 * 28) **done Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) *I am very impressed with what you've done so far. Keep up the good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:48, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) From the legal pad scrawling of Atarumaster88
 * 31) * Lot of short paragraphs need fleshed out or combined with others.
 * 32) **I've done a fair bit of this. Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * I'd say remove some of the shorter sections by combining them with others also.
 * 34) ** And a lot of section combining Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * Compare your appearances/sources list to the reference list. A quick check reveals no information from the following:
 * 36) ** Star Wars: Battlefront
 * 37) ** Some of those HoloNet news.
 * 38) ** Boba Fett: Crossfire
 * 39) ** Republic 49.
 * 40) ** Legacy of the Jedi
 * 41) ** And I'm sure there are more.
 * 42) ***Most of those were actually there - Legacy was ref'd 8 times, Crossfire and 49 were there but cited as Fight to Survive and 50. I did some expansion on the HNN stuff and added Battlefront. Yrfeloran 03:00, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) *Needs a non-canon appearance section. (Ugh)
 * 44) **I'm probably going to need help with this one. I've got the bare bones of one up. Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) ***I see most of them done. Is there additional information in the LEGO video games that's not there yet? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:22, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * Properly reference all Clone Wars cartoon series references by chapter.
 * 47) **Done for all IU refs Yrfeloran 03:35, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) *It's a lot better than it was, but still will need work, as others have already said. Feel free to drop by WP:NEGTC for additional help, though, or my talk page. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:27, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) From the full-fledged desk of Atarumaster88
 * 50) * Dooku's role in Jedi:Shaak Ti could use mention.
 * 51) **OK, it's got a mention Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) * Same thing with Republic 54.
 * 53) **Somebody who's read this in the past year definitely needs to double-check, but added. Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) * I'm not seeing any information from the Shadowfeed.
 * 55) **Added Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 56) ***<There are three or four Shadowfeed appearances in the appearance list, but only 1 reference that I saw. Did you get them all?
 * 57) ****There's one trivial one, and the fragment of a Fete day address that doesn't have much content besides "we're awesome, Republic sucks" Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) * Mention Dooku's role in the Battle of Jabiim.
 * 59) **mentioned Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) * Check also Republic 59, 60, and 61. I forget whether those have key mentions.
 * 61) ** They don't, but I added 64 Yrfeloran 00:58, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 62) * Yoda's lesson to Dooku in EGTTF might be good P&T material.
 * 63) ** I was thinking about doing that, but it's hard to wedge it in. He's like 7, too. Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 64) ***Added an oblique mention in Childhood Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 65) * Your EGTTF refs, at least, are all off and are seemingly removing content from the article.There's a sentence or two missing from his tutelage under Cerulian. When you reference, your first reference to a source should like like, but your subsequent references should only include to avoid errors. And also, the field of , the blah part is just a placeholder and so you can abbreviate to shorten the code, just keep it understandable.
 * 66) **The Thame stuff was due to a different malformed reference that I fixed. I'll trim some of these as I come across them, but with the amount of paragraph merging/etc. going around it is really useful as an editor in this particular situation to have more than one ref linked. Also "blah" should be full source name per Layout Guide, which I agree with. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 67) ***Heh, I stand corrected. Though the use of abbreviated referencing is sorta common. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 68) ****Yeah, there's some legacy ones on the Dooku page, but on an article this size when you're editing a section at a time it's a -massive- pain to look up what the page's nickname of the source you want is. Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 69) * All your references have the same error, it appears.
 * 70) * " Though Dooku's behavior and beliefs as a Jedi had previously been within the scope of Jedi orthodoxy,[1] there is evidence that in the period before he left the Order he flirted with the belief that the dark side of the Force could be called upon without personal corruption.[17]." This sentence is OOU and should be rewritten to conform with the MoS. At the very least, the tense is wrong.
 * 71) **Fixed I guess. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 72) * Lot of short sentences in the last paragraph of "Leaving the Order".
 * 73) **Made some a little longer? Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 74) * Need context on Palpatine. His double identity as Darth Sidious is not discussed, and the casual reader may not be awareof that.
 * 75) **Added this. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 76) * OOU/tense issues with this: "It is suspected that Dooku himself did this, but it is unclear how he accomplished it." also. Recall that EGTTF is an IU publication, if that helps.
 * 77) ** Fixed Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 78) * Jumps back and forth about his Sith status. He's supposed to be a Sith Lord in "Sith apprentice" but his Sith training is still ongoing during the Bando Gora episode. Clarify please.
 * 79) ** Noncontradictory. One becomes an apprentice first, then learns Sith stuff. See Vader. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 80) ***You have him listed as a "fully-fledged Sith Lord", not as a Sith apprentice, and then went on to later discuss his training.
 * 81) **** OK, removed the adjective Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 82) * 2nd paragraph of "Moving the pieces" could use a more varied sentence syntax.
 * 83) **fiddled with Yrfeloran 02:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 84) * "To the surprise of both parties, Dooku himself was present". Present where? Needs more context.
 * 85) ** Added context Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 86) * More context needed on initial mention of Vos and Secura.
 * 87) ** Added a little bit here. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 88) * More context needed on Ansion's alliances and Dooku's manipulations there.
 * 89) ** Added Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 90) * "The Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi then traced Jango back to his home on the planet Kamino. Kenobi found Jango Fett there, and also discovered the clone army that Dooku had once ordered. This army was now fully grown and ready for action." Condense this, but give some more context in general on Episode II. The Jedi rescue force in particular.
 * 91) ** OK, did a little more context.
 * 92) * Be specific about some Episode II details. List the factions involved in the CIS. List the creatures in the arena.
 * 93) ** Done, though the CIS stuff inevitably comes across as a little listy.
 * 94) * In general, it is not advisable to use the first names of characters. A few exceptions might include major characters, but not, say, Zam Wesell.
 * 95) ** OK Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 96) * More detail on arena battle and Dooku's role in it.
 * 97) ** Uh, OK, added that he watched from the balcony :P Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 98) * 2nd para of "The clones attack" is all short sentences.
 * 99) ** fiddled with Yrfeloran 02:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 100) * "spectacular duel" is POV.
 * 101) ** fixed Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 102) * Sev'rance Tann's role in Dooku's escape from Geonosis, as well as the Dark Acolytes blocking Windu in their tanks should be mentioned.
 * 103) ** Like Padme falling out of the gunship, I don't think this is really directly relevant to Dooku's article. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 104) ***I'll accept the explanation on the tanks, but I think Sev'rance Tann's role as the chief commander of the droid armies could use some explanation, and that ties in well with her role in helping Dooku escape. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 105) ****I added a little more context with Tann in the proper section. Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 106) *You're about halfway to my ending catchphrase, but I think there's plenty here for now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:26, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 107) " Even as the Separatist movement grew and coalesced around Dooku as a leader, the Jedi Council did not believe he could be behind the violence.[24] although he". I think your reference is eating some of your text here.
 * 108) **fixed Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 109) * 3 short paragraphs in "A new ally" could use merging.
 * 110) ** I did a little bit of addition, but I think merging those paragraphs would hurt more than it'd help Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 111) * More context needed on "Sidious said that it did not matter either way.".
 * 112) ** Added Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 113) * This is related to above, but Tann's role and actions are never explained properly in relation to Dooku.
 * 114) **Tried to address this Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 115) * Again, check your linking. A lot of things are overlinked, but don't worry too much about it; that can be corrected automatically.
 * 116) * The first name thing is fine with say, Anakin and Obi-Wan as long as it's not overrused, but certainly not with minor characters. Nothing you haven't seen before. ;-)
 * 117) ** I'll fix it as I go, but not for, say, Tallisibeth Enwandung-Esterhazy Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 118) ***Spoilsport. :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:22, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 119) * Just a general suggestion: Try reading the article aloud to see how it flows. Parts of it don't read that well, and a few small tweaks would fix those.
 * 120) * The section title "Miscellaneous villainy" needs reworded. Dare I say it doesn't sound encyclopediac?
 * 121) **Unencyclopediac...but -so- true. OK, reworded. Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 122) * These two don't flow well together: "Droids planted charges on the planet and prepared for detonation. The Separatist-allied inhabitents of Viidaav would have also been killed."
 * 123) **Reworded whole section Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 124) * "Miscellaneous villainy" has a large number of short paragraphs and the content is disjointed. Let the prose flow within you.
 * 125) **It's hard. Mostly random CWA stuff. Gave it a shot Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 126) * Short paragraphs in meeting on Vjun.
 * 127) **Did some work there. Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 128) *" She had previously been defeated and humiliated by Anakin Skywalker on Coruscant.[61] However, a Republic fleet arrived before the process was completed." These two have no tie-in, and don't flow well together either.
 * 129) **Added more context Yrfeloran 01:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 130) * Last paragraph on Saleucami needs more context, or give background on the battle more towards the beginning. Either way.
 * 131) **done Yrfeloran 01:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 132) * "Sidious also ordered Grievous to attack Coruscant and simultaneously to the Separatist assault on Tythe." Clarify this sentence.
 * 133) **did so Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 134) * "General Grievous was unaware that his hapless captive was also the feared mastermind behind the Confederation. Dooku arrived on the Invisible Hand and took charge of the prisoner." These two sentences don't flow well together.
 * 135) **Tried to segue better Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 136) * Link the Invisible Hand.
 * 137) **It was linked in the first mention Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 138) * Link to the saber forms and even provide some context on them if you feel it would be good.
 * 139) **I'd prefer not to, having just rescued the article from an unhealthy obsession with Makashi. I have some in the lightsaber training section, but it needs to stay out of the ROTS fight or else it will morph into "Ataru beat Makashi" instead of "Anakin beat Dooku". Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 140) ***Fair enough. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:35, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 141) *" In a burst of power, Anakin overpowered Dooku". The power of the sentence is a mite overwhelming.
 * 142) **did some rewording Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 143) * Remove the section header "Revelation". It's unnecessary and interrupts the events on Invisible Hand
 * 144) **OK....I did this, but I'm not sure I'm happy with it. Lose "Kill him now" quote, for one. Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 145) * Redlinks. Waaaay too many.
 * 146) **Down to three now Yrfeloran 04:58, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 147) *Keep working on it. Chances are that this'll go through a couple more reviews, but don't give up; this has potential. Have a Super Terrific Friendly-Unfrustrating Day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 148) From the squalid cublicle of Graestan (Part One):
 * 149) * Abbreviating the ref names would be most helpful in an article of such scope.
 * 150) **I abbreviated prime offender Essential Guide to the Force, but most everything else is linked only a few times. Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 151) *More thorough and consistent linking is desired.
 * 152) *POV-ish statements abound. "Legendary" and "vastly overmatched" in particular. I suggest going over the article, seeking out anything that isn't inherently neutral or makes value judgments not specifically established by canon.
 * 153) *It's pretty thoroughly established precedent in featured articles that aside from a few whole-name mentions, last names are to be used except in instances of multiple individuals mentioned in the article having the same last name. Please look through and change accordingly; I've already done a bit of Jinning Qui-Gons.
 * 154) **FWIW, for main characters, IMO, such as Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan, Luke, Leia, etc. it's permissible to use first names provided it's not overly done. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 155) * "Building from this foundation" doesn't really sit well with me.
 * 156) **I've rephrased this whole section Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 157) * Calling Cerulian a historian and then stating that his interests were in history is a bit redundant.
 * 158) **See above Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 159) * "Historically knowledgeable and politically apt" implies that he had a history of being knowledgeable and was apt for political reasons. Please rephrase; a shame, that was a pretty one.
 * 160) **See above Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 161) * "Dooku and Qui-Gon were forced to surrender to the pirates when Colicoid Eradicator droids threatened the factory's child workers, and were injected with toxins that paralyzed them and rendered them unconscious." – Clarify who has what done. Also, give a little explanation of motivations.
 * 162) **The scene itself is a little confusing - it's unclear who they surrendered too, and it's unclear who injected the, I did some cleanup Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 163) *More later. Thanks for your time. Graestan ( Talk ) 17:53, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 164) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan (Part Two):
 * 165) *"one of the only ones" – Yuck; reword, please.
 * 166) *Vosa was his second Padawan, not a second Padawan, which would be a no-no. Please revise.
 * 167) **Cleaned up, though I daresay you could have fixed it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 168) *"This was in a way the truth" steps a bit too far out of the universe for comfort.
 * 169) **Fixed. See above. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 170) *Explain that the Death Watch are Mandalorians.
 * 171) **Got it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 172) *The transition from Galidraan to Baltizaar, then back to Galidraan is a bit rough. Can this be rearranged?
 * 173) *No setup for Maul?
 * 174) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:24, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 175) *Was his bust in the Archives before or after he left? Please clarify.
 * 176) **Clarified Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 177) *It is stated twice that Dooku retired to Serenno and so forth.
 * 178) *An explanation for Sifo-Dyas's order with the Kaminoans is required. Why, who it was for, etc.
 * 179) **There's...not much I can do with this. Sifo-Dyas's motivations are still entirely unclear. It's a fuzzy, confused area of canon that makes very little plot sense. Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 180) *No mention of the Dagobah system's deletion?
 * 181) **Sure, threw it in. Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 182) *Establish what the Deep Core is.
 * 183) **Done Yrfeloran 04:37, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 184) *Okay, I demand either an Equipment section or at least a longer mention of the solar sailer in the bio. Also, Geonosian sailing vessels? Are we talking in space, or on Geonosis's as-yet-unseen seas?
 * 185) **Added some stuff Yrfeloran 03:42, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 186) *"ex-Mandalorians" – This can't be worded right. Aren't they Mandalorian by culture, not so much affiliation?
 * 187) **Fixed Yrfeloran 03:42, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 188) ***For what it's worth, I think the term "ex-Mandalorian" is used in Legacy: Noob. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:36, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 189) *No setup for Nat Secura.
 * 190) *"of the &hellip; of the" in the next paragraph reads awkwardly.
 * 191) *"While gathering support for secession from the Republic" – This has literally no context whatsoever.
 * 192) *It should be explained why Sidious was interested in Sheelal.
 * 193) *What personal grievance against the Huks? This reads something like a teaser; please go into some detail.
 * 194) *No mention of when and why Grievous took up his name.
 * 195) *Honestly, I'd rewrite the Grievous section. It needs to read a bit more like a story.
 * 196) *More later. Graestan ( Talk ) 02:18, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 197) From the Family-sized Pasta Bowl of Fiolli:
 * 198) *I've made a good way through the article, fixing up some things doing a first-run copyedit. Here are some other thoughts within the Biography section, divided by subsection&hellip;
 * 199) *Childhood:
 * 200) **"However, Lorian Nod was jealous of Dooku being chosen as a Padawan before him, and stole a Sith holocron from the quarters of Thame Cerulian." By linking these sentences you are saying that there is a connection between Nod's jealousy and him stealing the holocron. If this is the case, state what the connection is. Otherwise, sever the sentences.
 * 201) **Nothing precedes the next sentence stating that Nod was caught. If added as an introductory clause, you will have to restructure this sentence.
 * 202) **Did Nod and Dooku become bitter enemies before or after they went before the council? Something seems out of order here; though, this may be cleared up if it is stated that (and how, if possible) Nod was caught.
 * 203) **"His teacher sat on the Jedi Council, and was a keen historian, even inquiring into the history of the Sith." I'm not quite sure why this sentence is here or its overall relevance. It could simply be stated above that Cerulian sat on the Council by working it into his initial introduction, unless he was not seated on it by that time. Does the fact that Cerulian inquired into the Sith play a role for Dooku somehow? If not, I would strongly advise that this not be included.
 * 204) **I suggest combining the last two paragraphs into one, with the first beginning "Even under the tutelage of Cerulian, Master Yoda&hellip;" Then, the current location of this similar clause would become "With the combined influences of his Master and others, Dooku became&hellip;"
 * 205) *Knight and Master:
 * 206) **Link to Lorian Nod's headquarters.
 * 207) **"Dooku acted as a teacher to Jinn, not a friend, and the two drifted apart in later years." Later years implies that they drifted as they both got 'old and gray.' I remember reading that they gradually drifted apart over the years but that it began almost immediately after Jinn was knighted. If I am correct in remembering this, you might want to reword this sentence.
 * 208) **"The Council soon agreed that his skills made him well suited for such field work." Soon? I don't follow; don't think this word belongs in there.
 * 209) *Galidraan:
 * 210) **The subsection title isn't all that descriptive and doesn't really encompass all that is covered in this subsection. I would encourage a change, though others might not see the need to do so.
 * 211) **Komari Vosa isn't mentioned until the Galidraan subsection, but I believe should be mentioned in the subsection prior. Possibly, you could simply include it right after the "Old Guard" sentence. Unless, of course, Vosa was taken as a Padawan when the uprising began. Any other information you can add on Vosa and Dooku's reaction/thoughts toward/reasons for taking/etc. would be very useful in the relocated area.
 * 212) **"This was partially true, as he had hired Jango Fett and his followers, the True Mandalorians, to eliminate his own enemies, and was now working with Fett's enemy Vizsla and the Mandalorian splinter faction known as the Death Watch to destroy Fett and his faction." Very heavily this reads. This should be broken up into two, possibly three sentences.
 * 213) **"Dooku submitted a protest to the Jedi Council after Baltizaar, arguing that the Council was wasting Jedi lives for political reasons." Expand.
 * 214) *Leaving the Order:
 * 215) **"He was the last former Jedi Master to be counted among the Lost Twenty, and a bronzium bust of him was created to join the other sculptures of the Lost in the Jedi Archives." So, he was already one of the "Lost Twenty" before he left the Order? Reword and clarify.
 * 216) *Sith apprentice:
 * 217) **"Shortly after Dooku left the Order, Master Sifo-Dyas ordered a clone army in secret from the planet Kamino." There is a syntax error somewhere in there that makes the "in secret" part not work. Which are you considering secret or secretive?
 * 218) **"Information about secret Jedi hyperspace routes through the Deep Core region in the center of the galaxy were also stolen." Stolen or erased? Double check this. If you can confirm this as stolen, do not use "also" as it implies that these things had the same done to them. Rather, use "In addition", or "Additionally," at the head of the sentence.
 * 219) ***I'll do this later, but yes, stolen. Yrfeloran 16:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 220) *Moving the pieces
 * 221) **"On a mission to the planet Geonosis, on Sidious's behalf, he impressed Archduke Poggle the Lesser with his knowledge of ancient Geonosian atmospheric sailing vessels and was presented with a Punworcca 116-class interstellar sloop." You should separate the ship presentation from the rest of the sentence.
 * 222) **"Dooku's Sith training was soon interrupted by Sidious with an urgent matter." Earlier in the last section it is mentioned that Dooku was under instruction of Sidious, but this is an overt statement about training. What training? It is not clearly mentioned earlier and should be if he was in fact "training" in the ways of the dark side of the Force. Expand.
 * 223) ***Sidious mentions he's interrupting Dooku's training in Bounty Hunter, but we never directly see the training itself, though Dooku very vaguely refers to it in Labyrinth of Evil Yrfeloran 16:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 224) **"Dooku had previously encountered Vosa in her new identity and allowed her to live as an experiment, but now Sidious commanded her death." If she was seen or encountered earlier, she should probably be mentioned earlier. Expand.
 * 225) **Heh! More events only known about from Bounty Hunter dialogue. Very vague paraphrase from memory: Sidious:"You didn't kill her the last time you met. Why?" Dooku: *shifty* "An experiment." Sidious: "The experiment has failed. I want her dead." No more details than that. Yrfeloran 16:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 226) *A pair of miscellaneous thoughts:
 * 227) **Yes, this is only the first part, but do not be discouraged. Many, many authors have had their hands in the text since it has been created and you are doing a nice job ironing it out as best as possible. I commend you for this.
 * 228) **If you cite something at the end of a compound sentence, it is etiquette to make certain that both parts of the sentence are from that source. If not, cite the other source after the comma and before the conjunction. If the sentence isn't compound, try to avoid mid-sentence citations unless you are listing things out.
 * 229) *Keep up the good work and I'll be back with more later.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:12, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Former featured article. Yrfeloran 06:16, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I am happy to see someone tackle this and I would encourage you, Yrfeloran, to hack away at it. For what it's worth, I recall (several months ago) noticing that numerous chunks of fanon and fan speculation had made their way into this article, so as the revision process continues, I'd recommend proceeding suspiciously, never assuming that a source tag is legit unless yourself added or checked it. (I haven't even really looked at it yet, though, so for all I know somebody already cleansed it.)  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 12:39, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I did a good deal of the sourcing myself, and have spot-checked most of the rest. There was a serious fanon/NPOV purge that I did, and the non-biographical sections are now shorter. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Note to self: Done up to Clone Wars. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:26, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Small input from Tinwe, concerning the lightsaber Dooku used as a Jedi: I'd like to point you to the direction of this image. It shows that Dooku used the curve-hilt design already as a Padawan (I'm not 100% sure if this is his own saber or just another training saber&mdash;though at least I have never seen a curve-hilted one). Whatever the case, I think it deserves to be mentioned in the article. --Tinwe 16:09, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There's a mention in the continuity section of the BtS. As a book cover, the Legacy of the Jedi cover is not really canon. Especially since there's no scene with young Dooku wielding his own saber in the actual book, and the whole montage is kinda, IMHO, poorly done. Yrfeloran 00:49, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I could use some more feedback on this(objections or votes). I'd be happy to address any concerns with the article. Yrfeloran 01:51, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Curiously enough, our own articles place Tann's attack on Alaris Prime before Dooku's use of the Force Harvester. Just a thought. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:37, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Ack...I think the article initially had them that way. I'll double-check when I get back, but you're probably right. Yrfeloran 16:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There seems to be an overabundance of small, two- and three-sentence paragraphs. Don't be afraid to merge these, or to write larger paragraphs, as long as the prose flows well. Inline citations within paragraphs are acceptable.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 21:46, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm finding net access while abroad a little more difficult than I thought, but commented on a few objections. I'll still be gone for several more days. Keep the objections coming, I'll have plenty of time to address them when I get back Yrfeloran 16:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 13:30, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Lord Hydronium 03:18, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Fantastic work. Now we need Chris Trevas to draw a picture of Yamarus shaking hands with Cal Omas. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 12:53, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:22, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) I cleaned up what few grammar mistakes I could find. --Imperialles 16:10, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The biography begins a little suddenly, without even one introductory sentence. I can imagine it confusing people who might not have read the intro. Please remedy. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:13, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *That is pretty glaring. Good idea, I've added an introductory sentence that I think starts the article a bit better. Sing out if it's still a problem, though. Thefourdotelipsis 03:35, 14 April 2008 (EDT)
 * 3) **Looks fine. I'll read the rest of the article later; looks interesting. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:18, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Two minor things:
 * 5) * I presume we do, but I'm just making sure: we know he's male, right? Apparently we don't, but because of his voice it's a safe assumption (and impractical to have a genderless character article, too). A BtS note wouldn't be out of place, though.
 * 6) **He's played by a man, he sounds like a man's man's man...I'm loathe to put a Bts note like that on it. It just seems a bit like overkill.
 * 7) ***He's also played by a human, but you haven't added that to the article. I'm not going to push it and it's no big deal, though, so do as you please.
 * 8) * No mention in the bio of the Liberty 's destruction at Endor? Even if Yamarus wasn't necessary aboard at the time, it should be worth a mention.
 * 9) **Still haven't gotten around to reading this properly, but I will eventually. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:33, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ***I've added a bit at the end of the bio. I didn't do it initially since I thought it might raise questions about his death, but I suppose I've addressed that in the BtS. I think. Thefourdotelipsis 08:02, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) Needs a source that David Wessman created him. - Lord Hydronium 23:49, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 13) * Please say what Liberty is in the intro.
 * 14) **Done.
 * 15) * Also in the intro, Lenzer and the TIE Experimental Project could use a bit of context.
 * 16) **Done.
 * 17) * Same with the Hurrim.
 * 18) **Done
 * 19) * As well with Tydirium.
 * 20) **Done.
 * 21) * In the bio, it isn't initially mentioned that he commanded a task force with Liberty, then an unestablished task force is alluded to.
 * 22) **Done.
 * 23) * Establish what the Defiance is.
 * 24) **Done.
 * 25) * "Fold" is a metaphoric OOU term, and I don't think it belongs.
 * 26) **Done.
 * 27) * "It was the admiral's hope &hellip; Hoping to" is a bit heavy.
 * 28) **Done.
 * 29) * Mention XTS's Imperial connection in "Intelligence and counter-intelligence," if it is stated anywhere in the game.
 * 30) **Done.
 * 31) * Please state Ackbar's significance, and what Independence specifically is.
 * 32) **Done.
 * 33) * "Dunari agreed to aid the Alliance in exchange for escort and aid" – please reword.
 * 34) **Done.
 * 35) * The Hurrim need a bit of set-up in the body.
 * 36) **Done.
 * 37) * State what the Longshot is.
 * 38) **Done.
 * 39) * As well as the Tal'cara.
 * 40) **Done. Thefourdotelipsis 05:15, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) * Graestan ( Talk ) 03:07, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 42) Toprawa:
 * 43) *Is it really necessary to add the Alliance Fleet subset to this infobox affiliation? Sure, we have some "precedent" that does this, but we have that many more that don't. Looks messy and kind of unnecessary
 * 44) **It's something I've done before...I don't think it's really a problem, it just gives us a bit more specific info up there.
 * 45) *Can we specify what system this facility is located in? "as one of their agents had established that the Bretie Facility"
 * 46) **Done.
 * 47) *Same deal. Please specify what system. I do believe XWA did a nice job of always naming what system levels took place in: "he located Obsidian, Lenzer's center of operations."
 * 48) **No information on that one.
 * 49) *Please specify that the Python is a CR90, IIRC: "Yamarus sent his fighters and the corvette Python"
 * 50) **For the record, this is unnecessary and isn't actually required at all; the links are there to be clicked. I'm going to do it this time, but fair warning: It's not actually legitimate unless the detail rule is stretched.
 * 51) *Same. Please specify what class of ISD the Subjugator is: "Imperial Star Destroyer Subjugator"
 * 52) **Fixed.
 * 53) *Same. "nearly reached the Star Destroyer Imperator"
 * 54) **See, this one just requires people to hover their mouse over the link. At any rate, fixed.
 * 55) *You refer to the AA23 here as "the" AA23, but in no instances previously. Please choose the correct one and use it throughout for conformity: "the logs he had brought with him on the AA-23"
 * 56) **Removed.
 * 57) *If we know, please pipelink a sector here: "a new base of operations in the sector"
 * 58) **We don't since they begin to jet set.
 * 59) *It may be pertinent to specify here that Black Sun and XTS are all but one in the same. This, of course, relies on what the game specifies Yamarus knew between this connection. I can't remember that, nor can I remember if XTS as publicly linked to Black Sun: "Yamarus found it curious that the information had come from the notorious criminal organization Black Sun,"
 * 60) **Well, the whole point is that no one knew. Legitimate enterprise linked to massive criminal organization? :P
 * 61) * The paragraph beginning "While Skywalker and his team" could use more specific sourcing. You source everything to SOTE, but the very end of that paragraph should really be sourced to XWA.
 * 62) **Nevermind, I got this for you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:06, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 63) *This isn't exactly true. The "crew member" was actually the lone Bothan that had escaped from the Kothlis safehouse with the computer in SOTE, and had escaped off-planet aboard Fey'lya's shuttle. You should specify earlier that Fey'lya delivered the computer and this Bothan to safely earlier on and then clarify this: "one of the Razor ' s crew members was able to escape with the data and make it to the Independence"
 * 64) **Where is this stated? The game implies that it's Fey'lya himself who retrieves the plans. And the crew member certainly isn't Fey'lya.
 * 65) *Please specify ship class. Marauder, IIRC: "with the aid of the Mercury"
 * 66) **Fixed.
 * 67) *This makes it seem like Holtz commanded the entire Imperial presence in the entire Outer Rim, and I don't believe this was the case. Please reword to say what presence, specifically, he commanded: "Admiral Garreth Holtz was in charge of the Imperial presence in the Outer Rim Territories"
 * 68) **Fixed.
 * 69) *Very smooth read. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:02, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 70) **Thank you very much. Thefourdotelipsis 22:44, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

I presume there's no picture because no picture exists. Is there a picture of some object associated with him which could be used as a placeholder in the template anyway? &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:13, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * No, nothing at all, to my knowledge. We've got a couple of FAs without images in the template, so it's no biggie. Thefourdotelipsis 14:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I guess I'm thinking more about the image we'd put on the front page when it gets featured. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:17, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * We wouldn't have one. It does look a bit boring, but it's happened before, and it's only for a day. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:21, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Ugh. I feel all...nekkid. Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:57, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Very good. I like articles about Kaleesh generals.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:11, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Interesting fellow. Why is it that all the aliens in the Empire are bastards? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:13, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 21:13, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:15, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) --Eyrezer 00:12, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) This is decidedly one of the most interesting noms I've read all week. Great job, 4dot.  No objections from me.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:58, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:02, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Per rule 8, please remedy the red link in the intro. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:00, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Heh, I realized that in class today. Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 07:57, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * The way you speculatively word this with "seemed" leads me to believe that this is your own personal extrapolation. Please reword, or otherwise remove, as appropriate: "His bombing of K'avor did not seem to work into his final plan for Shiva IV at all"
 * 5) **Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 22:46, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *Otherwise clean. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:31, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Ackbar:
 * 8) * The first sentence could do with a tad more context. It assumes that the reader knows who Sheelal is, and could use more explanation about the war with the Yam'rii. Additionally, it could better explain that the two conflicts (the Yam'rii one and Sk'rr's one with the Empire) did not take place concurrently.
 * 9) **I've added a bit of context there, to clarify timelines and personalities. As for Sheelal, I'm a bit of an advocate of inviting readers to click links, but there's also the element of "Kaleesh warlord in the same vein as." If you think it needs further clarification, I'm happy to amend.
 * 10) ***Looks fine.
 * 11) * Sorry to be so ridiculously nitpicky, but "edge of known space" doesn't mean "edge of the galaxy" in my estimation.
 * 12) **That's fair enough. Fixed.
 * 13) * No mention at all of his "behemoth" physical size?
 * 14) **I thought I'd let "Approx. 3 meters", "intimidated by the towering figure of Sk'ar" and the picture do the talking.
 * 15) ***Fair enough, though I think a mention in the P&T would be good; it seems to be an important enough part of his character. It should also probably be mentioned that he was way above average size for his species; NEGAS lists a Kaleesh's average height as 1.8 meters.
 * 16) ****Interesting. I've added a bit in the P/T. Thefourdotelipsis 09:56, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *****Looks good. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:13, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * (Not an objection): This is probably because I am tired, but the "Shiva IV" and "Death" sections leave me needing to reread things to fully comprehend what's actually happening. I can't really be specific, though; sorry. I guess I'll wait to see what others say. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:52, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **I understand your plight: the story itself is so hackneyed that I struggled to get my head around it myself. A lot of things in the story genuinely make no sense, and I've alluded to this in the P/T. Thefourdotelipsis 07:57, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***I reread it this morning with some sleep in me and it looks okay. Interesting, if slightly strange, character and article. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:17, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) The infobox image is horrible. --Imperialles 16:11, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) *Wow, what a helpful, specific objection. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 20:55, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) *The other candidates are horrible-er. Thefourdotelipsis 00:35, 19 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Better images are incoming. Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 13 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Mostly done, though I suggest picking another infobox image. That 3/4ths of a face is the whole panel, it's not in the spine or something. I'll rescan that one if you want, but I'll wait for your selection before I do any more. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 20:27, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Five kadams high. Thefourdotelipsis 13:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Why did it have to be lizards? - Lord Hydronium 09:44, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:36, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:28, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The second paragraph in the bio jumps from Vader's dislike for Lizardman to his mission to Kar'a'katok quite suddenly; can some sort of "some time after his appointment" or something be added in between to remedy this? Other than that, an interesting read. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added. Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 4) * Please remember to add "was a male Gektl [in this case]" to the intro. This should be done for all character articles; if I'm mistaken, please advise.
 * 5) **I can't find the rule, if it exists. And there are many precedents of that not being in an article.
 * 6) ***Added it myself.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * "Imbued with vaulting ambition, Rahz effectively sold the freedom of his species for his own gain when offered Emperor Palpatine a way to bypass Hoszh Iszhir's shield in exchange for a commission in the Imperial Military." Ponderous and awkward, please rephrase and/or divide up this sentence.
 * 8) **I think it was the ass end of that article that was unwieldly. It's been exorcised.
 * 9) * If possible, please elaborate on why guerrerite was so valuable.
 * 10) **Not possible, sorry. No information in the source whatsoever, only that it's valuable.
 * 11) * "Rahz, caring naught for his fellow Gektls, traveled to Imperial Center, hoping for an audience with Emperor Palpatine." This is also a bit awkward.
 * 12) **I'd like to get a second opinion on this one. Generally, with these things, I can see where the problem is with my prose, but I'm just not seeing it here.
 * 13) ***After finding said second opinions, I've removed the third comma. Thefourdotelipsis 08:31, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Rahz was assigned to Lord Darth Vader" Any particular reason why you use the simple title of "Lord" instead of "Dark Lord of the Sith"? I fixed the intro one but seeing this in the bio made me wonder.
 * 15) **Well...that's how he's addressed. In many, many sources. It's his title, as much as "Dark Lord of the Sith."
 * 16) ***Resolved via IRC.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:27, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * Frankly I'm flabbergasted that you couldn't work in Luke's famous "Go ahead and cry!" quote. ;-)
 * 18) **Go ahead and cry! :P Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***Go ahead and chop up some onions! :-P ;-) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *TIMMMMMBERRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:03, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'd be much obliged if someone could replace the images with the colourized versions from Dark Horse. Thefourdotelipsis 13:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * "Colourized" -- interesting blend of American and real English, there, 4dot. Will you be doing more Aliens in the Empire articles? (I've got dibs on Gog :P ) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Nah, that's it for them, unless Part 3 gives us something interesting. Thefourdotelipsis 07:58, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Getting the "koovy" joke out of the way now. - Lord Hydronium 08:43, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:53, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Squibs!  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:18, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) You bet. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 03:12, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Super eliteness. Thefourdotelipsis 10:26, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "At the close of his twenty minutes, Ebareebaveebeedee bargained for another six minutes of airtime, which he used to add "You bet"." Is this part necessary? I think it's irrelevant.
 * 3) **It's a major political speech he gave, and it's a big enough aspect of the speech that HNN called attention to it. I think it is.
 * 4) ***If it's that important in HNN, then okay. I assume the "you bet" is about him promising not to leave the Republic.
 * 5) * Perhaps add a sentence to give context about how the Ugors system was made of trash.
 * 6) **Rejiggered this section.
 * 7) * "...and being forced to keep L8-L9." Is this part needed? Did the droid do anything important?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:36, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) **It is one of the few things that Scavenger Hunt insists stay constant, but on second perusal, it's not really relevant to Ebareebaveebeedee. Removed. - Lord Hydronium 21:12, 16 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

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Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 03:54, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Nicely done.  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 22:31, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Precedent setting! --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:18, 19 April 2008 (UTC)

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Comments
 * This is our first sector FA nom, and so is somewhat uncharted territory. I've tried to keep it analogous in structure to our planets FAs, differing where appropriate. Finally, if anyone has the game Rebellion, a screenshot of the map of Atrivis sector would be useful to place in the BTS. --Eyrezer 05:32, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Lord Hydronium 03:56, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 05:49, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:04, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) I got 1134 words when I counted. :-P And Galaxies does suck. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:47, 19 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments
 * No better quotes, or good ones for the bio. Galaxies sucks. Also, 1,130 words. - Lord Hydronium 03:56, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I should also note that the Imperial commander doesn't seem to have a name that I can find. Again, Galaxies sucks. - Lord Hydronium 04:04, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:57, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

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Comments

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 13:15, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Admiral. Pfeh! -- Ozzel 02:24, 19 April 2008 (UTC)

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Comment
 * Thanks to Ozzel, who helped sort some things out (Jaymach, Eyrezer and Jedimca0 too. And some other people, I'm sure.) Thefourdotelipsis 13:15, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * "[...] after ferrying Vader to the incomplete battle station to oversee the final phases of construction." In ROTJ, Vader's shuttle lifts off from the Avenger, not from the Executor. Did Windham mess up here?. --Borsk Fey'lya  Talk 14:07, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, the SOTE comic shows him on the Executor as well. But neither actually say he takes the shuttle from the Executor. So...he must have transferred to the Avenger, then gone to the DSII. No, it doesn't make sense to me either. Thefourdotelipsis 22:15, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

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 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:11, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Objections resolved over IRC. The Inq shall never relinquish their powah! Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:09, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) I'm in a productive mood. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:17, 19 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Dear Summar:
 * 2) *Calling the Republic and Empire "bad" is POV: "and knew that the Galactic Republic before it was every bit as bad as the Empire"
 * 3) *I oppose the validity of this. This suggests that the Empire was losing the war, when this is not the case at all. Strongly suggest removing and replacing with something else. "...and kept the Rebels on the run" or something: "and helped them turn the tide in the Galactic Civil War."
 * 4) *Unfortunately, I believe your entire "Battle of Endor" section will have to go. Unless I'm mistaken and missed it somewhere, BTM does not state in any capacity that the Tyrant, with Lennox in command, ever participated at Endor. My sincere apologies if this leaves you below the 1000 word limit. :(
 * 5) *Your BTS is problematic:
 * 6) **I'm not sure where this is coming from, but you'll need to source this Piett confusion. Can we say who/what, specifically, attributes the line to Piett?: "There was initially some confusion among fans about Lennox's only line in the film, which is often erroneously attributed to Firmus Piett"
 * 7) **I'm not exactly sure what you're implying here. It seems that since his face is not fully visible, it may be Piett? I'm looking at the movie right now and he turns his head enough to clearly distinguish him, I feel. The article's image shows this as well. Please source this along with the previous objection: "although Lennox's face is not fully visible when he speaks, his voice is much different to Piett's."
 * 8) ***Unless you're sourcing this to Who's Who, with that article stating all of this confusion, my bad. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:03, 19 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) **This is entirely incorrect. Perhaps the Who's Who article does say this, but I'm also looking at the novelization right now, pg. 48, and the officer of this line and scene is identified as Needa aboard the Avenger, not Piett: "Part of the confusion was due to the fact that Donald F. Glut's movie novelization assigned the line to Piett."
 * 10) **This reads as though X-wing identified him by name in 1993, when they did not: "Lennox went unmentioned and unnamed until 1993, when Star Wars: X-wing was released."
 * 11) *It kind of seems like you're missing some BTM information: "Lennox, who is totally dedicated to his starship and its crew, despises the political maneuvering common among Imperial officers." Please specify that he is "totally dedicated to his starship and his crew" in the P&T and possibly the bio if appropriate.
 * 12) *Also, I would strongly recommend speaking to Muuurgh about possible information from the radio drama and the RD's script. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:57, 19 April 2008 (UTC)

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 * I'll be making up for all these short noms with some considerably longer ones in the Summer. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:17, 19 April 2008 (UTC)