Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of Polomie


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Battle of Polomie

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:10, February 10, 2013 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:WP:VG

(3 ECs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) What an infernal racket! Everbody, flee!  501st  dogma ( talk ) 00:45, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * 2) Ahhhh, my ears!-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  14:21, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) First time in history a battle was won just by noise? Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 17:21, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * 4) Bwa ha ha.&mdash;  18:46, February 12, 2013 (UTC)
 * 5) Did a copy-edit.  Trak Nar  Ramble on 07:17, February 13, 2013 (UTC)
 * 6) Winterz (talk) 15:08, February 13, 2013 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I noticed you removed my comma addition, and well, this might be a problem because your first sentence is huge enough and warrants at least one. I mean.. you give locations, participants and even dates, all these without a single comma. Winterz (talk) 17:51, February 13, 2013 (UTC)
 * 2) *I removed the commas since they didn't look right there. Commas aren't designed to just break up sentences; they have to be used in the proper places. Personally, I don't think the sentence is that long. I'm not really breaking any grammar rules that I can think of. However, if you prefer, I'll break it up into two sentences.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 17:55, February 13, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) **Okay that will do. I'm not sure if your grammar rules differ there about the comma, but here something we learnt back on primary school is how to easily distinguish places that may warrant a comma. "Start reading (slowly) the sentence and if you involuntarily pause to inhale once before the end, then the phrase is too big and needs some sort of separation". Also, when you converge several ideas or points, that certainly needs punctuation. Example: "Roses are blue, blue is dark, dark is scary" sounds a lot better than just adding several connectors as in "Roses are blue which was dark and that is scary" like you did there. So yeah it's kind of a grammatical mistake. Anyway, I'll quit whining, just wanted to make my point. :p Winterz (talk) 18:33, February 13, 2013 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I see your point, but to make my point clear. :P Your example does not mesh with my sentence. Saying "Roses are blue, blue is dark, dark is scary" is not a proper sentence anyway, since it's a run-on sentence. Likewise, your second example sentence is incorrect since it once again doesn't properly utilize conjunctions and commas. My original sentence was not a run-on sentence since it was only one independent clause. If I had said something like "There was a battle on Polomie and it was fought by the Empire and Rebellion and it was in the years 2 or 1 BBY," then it would be incorrect, since it would be a run-on sentence. However, the sentence I originally had contained only one independent clause. Nevertheless, it's two sentences now, so it doesn't really matter. Cheers.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 19:27, February 13, 2013 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Not going to object over this, but should Rebu be mentioned by his title, the Inspector-General? Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 17:21, February 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * 2) *I don't see why not. Thanks for the review.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 19:14, February 11, 2013 (UTC)