Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Vegath Tist


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Support
 * 1) Another nomination from the DarkStryder series. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:28, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Impressive. Though, I would like to see a battle or a lightsaber duel outta you sometime soon&hellip;that, would be interesting. —Tommy ( There are no Jedi here ) 14:01, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Following IRC objections and cleanup.  Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 10:46, 5 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ditto or sumthin' like that --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:48, 5 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Excellent as always. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:38, 7 June 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) The Anvil:
 * 2) * Eliminate one of the ref tags in the infobox about his eye color, unless absolutely necessary.
 * 3) **I eliminated the second one, and moved the reference about the changing eye colour into the article.
 * 4) * "At some point, he was cast out and shunned by his own family for an unspecified deed, although his intense addiction may have been the cause." May have been the cause is POVish.
 * 5) **True, but that's how it's explained in the Sourcebook. It says he was shunned and an outcast, and speculates that his addiction was the cause.  There are no more specifics. I'd have to leave it out, but I feel it adds weight to the first section.  Rewording it would still call for speculation, though.
 * 6) * "Making the short journey from the Minos Cluster to the Kathol sector, Tist ended up on the planet Kal'Shebbol, where he fell in with a local crime boss." Who is this local crime boss you speak of, and crime boss should be linked (crime lord).
 * 7) **Linked to crime lord, but the identity of the crime boss is not revealed.
 * 8) * I would reorganize the second paragraph of the "Serving on the FarStar" section, so that the bit about the DarkStryder genetic engineering comes before the bit about Tist being regarded with awe.
 * 9) **Reworded.
 * 10) *Otherwise, all good. —Tommy ( There are no Jedi here ) 20:26, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thank you! - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 23:18, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) Toprawa:
 * 13) * This reads as if this is a unique trait to him, specifically, when (AFAIK) all Arcona are easily addicted to salt. Please reword appropriately: "was a male Arcona who was also a salt-addict and outcast from his family."
 * 14) **Reworded.
 * 15) * Little context for this, please: "from the grip of the DarkStryder."
 * 16) **Added some context.
 * 17) * Does the source present this deed as "unspecified" from an IU context, or are you saying it's unspecified because the source doesn't clearly say? If it's the latter, please remove the "unspecified"
 * 18) **Tist's bio says: "shunned by his own family for some unknown deed, but possibly due to his intense addiction to salt".
 * 19) ***Ok. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:38, 7 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * Same deal. If this is your speculation, please remove: "although his intense addiction may have been the cause"
 * 21) **See above
 * 22) * Can we add anything to the final sentence in the P&T or otherwise combine it with the first paragraph to avoid the one-sentence paragraph?
 * 23) **Expanded the second paragraph.
 * 24) * Finally, not a rule per se, but I would ask that you kill the red link I've created for you in the intro Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:24, 6 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) **Heh ... done. It's little more than a stub, though. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 23:33, 6 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) ***Thanks. :) Stubs are just fine. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:38, 7 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * There are no quotes for the character since he was not featured in any in-universe narrative. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:28, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * What about a generic quote about salt-addicted Arconas, FarStar crewbeings or something like that? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:35, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Just for that reason&mdash;they're generic. Quotes should relate specifically to the individual in question. —Tommy ( There are no Jedi here ) 13:55, 4 June 2008 (UTC)