Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Crispus Commons (second nomination)

Crispus Commons

 * Nominated by: ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:29, January 23, 2015 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I had actually intended to reply to the remaining objections yesterday, but I got distracted and then today the original nomination was closed like snap for them not being answered... so, yeah. To review, the unaswered objections were as follows, along with my responses that I'm adding, having edited the article. The objections listed were all by Ayrehead:


 * You still effectively say that Clone Wars veterans got sent their twice in the same sentence. I'd include the context for the war immediately after you mention it.
 * I have reworded this so that, as far as I can tell, the described problems no longer exist. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:29, January 23, 2015 (UTC)


 * The extra detail on the shelter is good, but you need to mention when he actually returns to it and Hera finds him (if I'm remembering the details correctly).
 * I have now added those details. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:29, January 23, 2015 (UTC)


 * I think the first sentence of the bts now needs to be split.
 * It's now two sentences. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:29, January 23, 2015 (UTC)

If anyone needs to see it, the original nomination and the objections/answers are here. ProfessorTofty (talk) 02:29, January 23, 2015 (UTC)