Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Rawk

Rawk

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:46, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Probably one of the coolest Skywalkers, IMO&hellip;

Support

 * 1) Damn, Skywalkers can grow awesome moustaches. Menkooroo 13:50, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 16:30, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) -- 1358  (Talk) 12:59, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) If he isn't Sam Elliott then I don't know who is.  NAYAYEN : TALK 11:58, May 30, 2010 (UTC)

Object

 * One quickie: Is Anakin Skywalker important enough to mention in the intro? -- 1358  (Talk) 14:10, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * It seems to be, in sources for Cade, they list Anakin and Luke as his descendants. I saw no reason not to do it in Rawk's intro.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:33, May 19, 2010 (UTC)

Star:

 * Does the Insider article explicitly say that Skeeto is Droo's child, because from the text on the Skeeto article, I was under the impression that he was adopted by both Rawk and Droo like Micah was. Judging by the context here in the Rawk article, I'm assuming Droo adopted Skeeto before she met Rawk?
 * Fixed.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * " Rawk mantained a friendship with the Shipmaster Ure'monbarak on the planet Dac, which supported his family." How did his friendship with Shipmaster Ure'monbarak support Rawk's family? Did Ure'monbarak provide Rawk with work?
 * Adjusted.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Why was Black Sun attacking Rawk's Nest? Was there a reason behind it?
 * The only reason given is something about them making Rawk paying them for protection; no other reason is given. Added this, please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * "They brought her inside and she explained to the family how she had survived the massacre" I think this sentence could use a little more elaboration, as well as maybe explaining her past connection to Cade and a brief explanation of why she was after Cade.
 * It's done, though I'm still not sure this belongs here. I don't necessarily feel this kind of info is relevant to the article, but it's your call.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * You may be right, but I feel it may help clarify later events, especially why Rawk and Droo would want to save Rae based on her connection to Cade.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 16:30, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * "...when Fel explained that Rae was an Imperial Knight, Cade tried to attack them" Okay, Cade just found out that Azlyn Rae is an Imperial Knight, but why did he try to attack the other Knights?
 * Again, it's added, but I'm still not entirely sure it's relevant.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * "Rawk bid his nephew farewell as Cade, his crew, Shado Vao, Rae, Draco, and Krieg departed to carry out the plan regardless." Okay, Cade was just attempting to attack the Imperial Knights, and now they are going on a mission with him? I'm confuzzled.
 * Taken care of, I believe.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * "Aware that Cade had lied about Rae wanting to live, gave Rae to Droo, and Rawk promised Cade to do whatever it took to save Rae." Maybe make a mention here that Droo asked him if Rae said she wanted to live, and he lied and said yes.
 * Added to the first paragraph.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Okay, I think that is all.  StarNeptune Talk to me! 17:22, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, Star!--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 12:26, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * You're welcome :D  StarNeptune Talk to me! 16:30, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

QGJ
Just one: "The two attacked each other, but quickly managed to calm down." The second part seems to me to be a rather odd way of phrasing it. If they were fighting, why would they bother trying (managed) to calm down?  NAYAYEN : TALK 17:27, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * In the first couple of paragraphs of the "Early life" section, could you use Nat instead of Skywalker to avoid confusion with Kol?
 * Done.-- 17:38, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Since he is no longer affiliated with the Jedi, I believe you should use the GFFA character infobox instead of the current one.
 * Done.-- 17:38, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Otherwise, quite good. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 10:48, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, QuiGon!-- 17:38, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * In the comic, after Rawk berates Cade, he punches Rawk once. Rawk does likewise, then Rawk tells the family that they'd sort it out in the morning; hence the "quickly managed to calm down" part.-- 23:15, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Oh, thanks for the review!-- 03:52, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * No worries :P  NAYAYEN : TALK 11:58, May 30, 2010 (UTC)

See, I got around to it...

 * Do you think the intro could be condensed just a tad? The level of detail there could probably be dialed down a few notches, I think. More of a general overview, I would think. Just keeping the Main page in mind, after all. ;)
 * "and told Cade to leave Iego if he were to tell Rawk's children their father's reasons for leaving the Jedi." - This makes it sound as though he's saying "You can tell them, but you'll have to leave if you do." Doesn't he more... threaten Cade? My memory's foggy, but there's probably a better way to phrase that.
 * Otherwise, an enjoyable read. Good show! Thefourdotelipsis 08:48, June 3, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

 * Thanks to for a pre-nom review.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:46, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * And let's not forget, Rawk&mdash;like Antares Draco&mdash;punched Cade Skywalker in the kriffin' face!-- 03:09, May 24, 2010 (UTC)