Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Lumiya's lightwhip


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Lumiya's lightwhip

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:07, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Bad chick wit' a weapon&mdash;metal, leather, & light; somethin special, not yo average, baddest lil' thing in sight&hellip;

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:10, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Cylka  -talk- 08:28, March 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Grunny  ( talk ) 04:43, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 04:53, April 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Very nice. A good model for future lightsaber nominations. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:39, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) A couple of tweaks based on a technicality. Otherwise, nice work. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:11, April 26, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I didn't find much wrong with the article. However, the lightwhip was packaged along with Lumiya, Luke Skywalker, and his lightsabers in the comic pack with Star Wars 96. Can you add this in the BTS? --Jedi Kasra (comlink) 16:01, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *All set. Thanks a lot for the review and that bit of information. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 20:49, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **The rest of the article looks good to me. Good job, Tommy.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:10, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Cylka:
 * 5) * In the intro it isn't clear that Luke Skywalker is the Jedi Master Lumiya is fighting since you had referred to Skywalker as a Jedi Knight earlier.
 * 6) **Addressed. —Tommy 9281 15:30, March 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * Lumiya's was quite unique; along with several filaments of yellow plasma - When you are describing the three extension types here, could you just add in that they are "extension types." It will then make things clearer in the next paragraph.
 * 8) **Addressed.
 * 9) * Severe wounds could also be inflicted by them even after the device was deactivated. - I'm pretty sure I know what you mean by this sentence, but could you specify what "them" and "device" are.
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) * allowed her to maintain control of situations where the weapon's use was required - This makes it sound as if she used a variety of weapons in her battles. Could you clear this up a bit.
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * Lumiya was tasked with the creation of her own Jedi weapon. - Should the phrase "Jedi weapon" be used here since she is always referred to as Sith?
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * was the legend of the abominable cyborg Lumiya - This sounds a bit POVish. Is that what was found in the source?
 * 16) **Sort of, but I've changed it to read more encyclopedic. Addressed.
 * 17) * In the intro you name Skywalker a Jedi Knight during their first battle, and later a Jedi Master but that isn't continued in the bio. Skywalker's Jedi ranks aren't used consistently and this may interrupt the flow of the article a bit.
 * 18) **I removed the usage in the intro so that it is more consistent with the rest of the article. Addressed.
 * 19) * I'm not sure that I would label their duel on Roqoo Depot a "quarrel." The word quarrel implies more of a verbal exchange than a physical one.
 * 20) **I thought about that too. Addressed.
 * 21) *A really interesting topic, Tommy! Cylka  -talk- 03:47, March 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) **Thanks for the review, Cylka. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy 9281 15:30, March 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) Toprawa:
 * 24) * Any reason why a specific article is not afforded or at least redlinked for this Vjun duel? "who Lumiya defeated in a vicious duel on the planet Vjun"
 * 25) **Addressed.
 * 26) * Same basic objection here: "Soon afterward, her lightwhip was employed in a duel against rogue Emperor's Hand Mara Jade"
 * 27) **Addressed.
 * 28) * Same here too: "where the whip was briefly wielded in a duel with Dinn."
 * 29) **Addressed.
 * 30) *That's it. Very well-researched and organized. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:30, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) **Thanks very much for the review, Toprawa. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy 9281 20:25, April 26, 2010 (UTC)

Comments


 * has already been asked to provide rescans for the three poor-quality images. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:07, January 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Red has come thru yet again in the clutch. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:46, February 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * And here's that for the comic pack link for you. According to it, Lumiya is an all new figure. .--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:33, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you sooooo much for that, Kasra. I owe you one. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 20:49, January 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * No problem.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:10, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Is it OK to use RebeScum's photos without permission? I know LucasFilm doesn't care if we use stuff fair use, but RebelScum might. It's often safer to use Hasbro's official photos (like this one), or to just email RebelScum and ask. ~ SavageBob 03:11, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * I discussed this with several Admins (who also happen to be Inquisitors) and they gave me the OK to use the image. In the event that something changes, I have no problem taking it down. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 05:39, January 25, 2010 (UTC)