Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Rakata


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

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Support
 * 1) Accurate, concise and complete. I believe that it is worthy of being a featured article.

Object -- Jaina Solo ( Talk ) 16:21, 29 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Infobox needs properly referenced. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:12, 27 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 1) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 2) *Bad grammar in the infobox.
 * 3) *Distinctions and Famous Members fields could use cleanup/expansion.
 * 4) *This is more of a stylistic concern, but could we get the large round numbers {e.g., 500, 20,000) spelled out?
 * 5) *Links to sentient and galactic history would be nice in the intro and article.
 * 6) *"eat and defile the bodies of slain enemies" is POV.
 * 7) *Introduction needs a rewrite to correct stilted prose.
 * 8) *The article itself, particularly the Infinite Empire section and its first paragraph, should be shifted so as to give a proper start; right now it reads as though it was an extension of the introduction which, IMHO, flows badly.
 * 9) *"their meteoric rise to power" seems a bit POV-ish; surely this could be phrased better.
 * 10) *The entire third paragraph of the first section (detailing dealings with the Sith) is, if not POV, at least a really bad wording. Also, surely there is room for expansion of this incident.
 * 11) *Is it my imagination, or did the civil war come after the plague? If I'm wrong, nevermind.
 * 12) *The entire Infinite Empire section reads like a series of disjointed paragraphs that only touch briefly on the points they attempt to cover. Please expand and address transitioning issues.
 * 13) *"Elders tribe" should be "Elder tribe" or, better yet, "the Elder Rakata".
 * 14) *"Darth Revan and Darth Malak's timely arrival in the system gave the elders a perfect opportunity" reads awkwardly.
 * 15) *The entire Jedi Civil War section, particularly the third paragraph, needs expansion.
 * 16) *Please incorporate remarks in parentheses into the prose; if it's worth mentioning, it's worth mentioning in the context of a sentence.
 * 17) *"under the Rakata's thumb" is POV.
 * 18) *Please capitalize the "m" in "Map" for Star Map.
 * 19) *Improper use of apostrophes; "Builder's" should be "Builders'" throughout the article when used in the possessive form.
 * 20) *When mentioning the "mysterious box" prison, game information should receive a footnote indicating that it is optional. Revan does not have to open the box; also, "after playing with one such device" sounds, well...silly.
 * 21) *Kindly eliminate the bullet points from the Behind the scenes section; as well, a link to the Rakatan Band will suffice instead of quoting the item's stats. In addition, "obviously" in the same paragraph is unneeded.
 * 22) *Is an item in the BtS about the species from Mass Effect really necessary?
 * 23) *TIMMMMMMBERRRRRR!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 03:45, 27 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 24) From Jaina Solo
 * 25) *The intro needs to be expanded.
 * Image:Unknown world.jpg could be properly sourced.
 * 1) **Sourced for kicks and giggles.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 07:01, 30 December 2007 (UTC)

Comments
 * Will the real nominator please sign? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:12, 27 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Per Ataru. Also, the FAN template is not appended to the actual article. Please remedy this.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 03:45, 27 December 2007 (UTC)

Remove Nom (Inq only)
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 07:07, 3 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 17:49, 6 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Since no one has come to claim it.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:40, 7 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Graestan ( Talk ) 01:53, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Green Tentacle (Talk) 00:13, 10 January 2008 (UTC)