Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jak Sazz


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Jak Sazz

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:18, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And you thought the guys at the Mos Eisley cantina were strange...

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nice job. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:13, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Is Xicer going to be the next AC? :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:29, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:26, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Great work; and an interesting topic, to say the least.  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 22:34, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  JangFett  (Talk) 22:35, March 29, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * he was respected for his many abilities. Respected by whom?
 * 3) **Nobody in particular as far as I can tell, it's pretty vague.
 * 4) * Mention that the Complex was on Byss in the first sentence. Otherwise, the New Republic infiltrated the Emperor's Citadel on the planet Byss seems to be a completely unrelated event.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * although Sazz was considered an outcast even among them. Does the source actually state he was an outcast among his own species?
 * 7) **Yes, he was considered an "untouchable" among the Ab'Ugartte. Basically, he was lowlife to them and they stayed away from him.
 * 8) *Goob job. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:17, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thank you for the review. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 14:34, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Toprawa:
 * 11) * Does the source literally say the species was "little known?" Otherwise, I would suggest removing that part: "a little known species"
 * 12) **Yep, that's exactly what the source says.
 * 13) ***Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:29, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) * Please at least leave a redlink for his ship: "He typically used Grivooga to repair his old starship"
 * 15) **Redlink added. I'll try to create an article for it soon.
 * 16) * I've broken up the biography into three smaller paragraphs. Is there any way we can expand the third, one-sentence paragraph at all? Perhaps elaborating a bit on what he was doing there, or any minor role he played in the scene? If not, you might choose to reconnect that sentence with the second paragraph for a cleaner look.
 * 17) **There's pretty much nothing else that can be said. The two pictures of him in the article are literally his only appearances in the comics. He takes part in no other scenes. I'll move the sentence back up.
 * 18) * Was he not given an entry in the CSWE as well? "He was also given entries in the second edition of A Guide to the Star Wars Universe and the Star Wars Encyclopedia." Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:10, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **Added. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 21:25, March 29, 2010 (UTC)

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