Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tyvokka


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Tyvokka

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:53, April 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And here... we... go.

(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:33, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) RAWrnWaRthRAA RAA ROO. (You make me proud, Plo Koon) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:11, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) IRC reviewed. -- 1358  (Talk) 13:25, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Excellent work. ~ SavageBob 04:49, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 14:15, May 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) --Eyrezer 10:09, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Why does LucasFilm hate Wookiees?
 * 2) * Perhaps you should create an article on the ear-bud translators Stark uses?
 * 3) **I've actually removed the sentence wholesale. I put it in there as I was jotting down the events of the comic, but it's PbP, and largely irrelevant.
 * 4) * Context on Mount Avos.
 * 5) **In so far as Tyvokka is concerned, the relevant context is there: "the defensible position of Mount Avos."
 * 6) * The last sentence of the bio is rather confusing. It needs some context on Order 66 and the formation of the Galactic Empire.
 * 7) **Good point. It's in there now.
 * 8) * In the P&T, you use "humility" in both of the two first sentences. While this is merely aesthetic, would you mind using a synonym for one of them?
 * 9) **It's also poor writing on my part. :P Changed the second one to "modesty."
 * 10) * "The Wookiee Jedi Master was said to be able to "sense the future"—while he was kept focused on the present by his instinctive knowledge of the Force, he was also able intuit all the possibilities stemming from a given situation." The dash is really weird here. Perhaps a semicolon or just a comma would be better?
 * 11) **Used a semi-colon instead. Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 00:03, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) It should be noted in the BTS that he received an entry in The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia. This should also be included as one of the sources.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:58, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) *Added it to the sources; as for the BTS, it doesn't really need to go there. It would mean listing all the other stuff he's been in, and he's been in enough stuff since his creation for it to not be remarkable that he's in CSWE. Thefourdotelipsis 14:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **OK. Good job, Fourdot.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:33, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) Before I review it, I've got two things for you. Most colors have links. Brown needs to be linked. Also, use the dialogue template only for three or more speakers; use quote for everything else.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:04, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) *Those are disambig pages, for the colours. I didn't think that we linked to disambigs. The quotes are fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 12:10, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **Hmm. In that case, I could be wrong. I'll talk to some other people and find out.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:12, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***We do link to colors, regardless of the fact that it's a disambig page. It's not a huge deal, but you should link for colors.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:58, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 20) * Is "Republic Classic era" an in-universe term appropriate to use in the main text of an article? (I'm really not sure, so please let me know!)
 * 21) **Yes, Republic Classic era is an IU era. It's "Rise of the Empire era" that's OOU. Don't ask me why we have it in infoboxes though...
 * 22) * No information from Jedi vs. Sith? ~ SavageBob 01:23, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **No, just a mention that he was Koon's master. Thefourdotelipsis 01:31, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) Checked the Fact File? --Eyrezer 08:02, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) *Checked. Thefourdotelipsis 06:09, May 21, 2010 (UTC)

Comments


 * You might be lulled into thinking that he's interesting. Thefourdotelipsis 14:53, April 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Added CUSWE link for you.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 21:46, April 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * If you're going to link to yellow, than you either need to link to brown or (and I can't believe I'm saying this) remove the link to yellow.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)