Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Gwarrk


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Gwarrk

 * Nominated by:-- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:41, September 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part one of my Gauntlet of Death project. Thanks to Qui-Gon Jinn for the pre-perview

(0 ACs/3 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Pre-nom reviewed. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:56, September 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  JangFett  Talk 11:25, September 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Checks out OK with me. Great job.    -Gmalek 23:47, October 17, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * "Gwarrk stated that the Jedi had created the army for warfare and he put the clones to their purpose. He also stated that the troops had failed because their power was not great enough." "stated" is repetitive. Also, is there a way to merge these sentences together? It's rather redundant, and gets too pbp, if you mention one thing that he said in one sentence and then mention more in another sentence.
 * 3) * JangFett  Talk 19:50, September 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Fixed. Thanks for the review, Jang. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 09:09, September 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) The Grand Master
 * 6) *Before I even begin, I'm seeing several grammar issues. Normally I would fix these myself, but it is a recurring mistake in your noms. Please try to fix these.
 * 7) **Fixed some.
 * 8) ***Lee, you corrected the spelling of one word. Please go through this carefully and fix your grammar.
 * 9) ****Sorry Jon. I didn't found anymore
 * 10) *****Lee, it's not the job of the AC to translate your articles into English for you. If you can't find any grammatical errors yourself, then try to find someone who is willing to help you with them.
 * 11) * I'm also seeing some POV issues.
 * 12) **Didn't really found one. Maybe some examples ?
 * 13) ***Please review WP:NPOV.
 * 14) ****Reviewed and removed two or three.
 * 15) *****I've taken care of the last one for you. Try to remember this in the future.
 * 16) *I'll give another review once these are fixed. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 02:04, September 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Thanks. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:12, September 30, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) I'm working still to adress this objection. If you want to remove it it is allright and I re-nominate it when I have fixed the issues. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:27, October 20, 2009 (UTC)

Remove nomination (AgriCorps vote only)
 * 1) Unaddressed objection for 3 weeks.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:13, October 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:16, October 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Please take the time to correct the grammar issues before bringing it back here.  CC7567  (talk) 19:49, October 20, 2009 (UTC)