Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/BT7 Thunderstrike


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BT7 Thunderstrike

 * Nominated by: Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 21:05, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:Another The Old Republic nom.

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) &mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 23:46, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) Looks good.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  12:20, June 30, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) Menkooroo 13:57, July 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) Menkooroo 13:57, July 8, 2011 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Axinal
 * 2) *Pretty good for the most part, just a couple of things:
 * 3) ** Could we get some context on the "Exchange"? We don't necessarily need to know the details of Korr's "messing up" of their operations, but it would be good to know what the Exchange was.
 * 4) ***Added a little context. Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:39, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) ** While we're on the subject, could we get a less colloquial phrase than "messing up"?
 * 6) ***How's that? Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:39, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) ** At the very end, you tell us that "it was Korr's old friend and former Jedi Knight Aryn Leneer." We, as the readers, already know this from above. Instead of telling us who was in the ship, as we already know, could you perhaps give a brief description of Korr's reaction to finding out?&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 22:15, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Does that work? Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:39, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 9) ** Also, please try to remember that, except in 4+ digit numbers, a comma is almost always followed by a space. Other than that, looks good.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 22:17, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 10) ***OK got it. Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:39, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 11) ****Great work, Cal.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 23:46, June 24, 2011 (UTC)
 * 12) *****Thanks Ax!! :) Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 00:18, June 25, 2011 (UTC)
 * 13) Yo
 * 14) * Can you give a more specific timeframe than "the days of the Old Republic" The Old Republic lasts for tens of thousands of years. Even if you just dated the Sacking of Coruscant, it would be good. Menkooroo 07:16, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 15) **How's that? Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 14:14, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 16) Imperators II
 * 17) * 3,653 BBY can't be sourced to Deceived.  Imperators II (Talk) 17:13, July 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 18) **Fixed. Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 18:59, July 7, 2011 (UTC)