Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of the Quermia system


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Battle of the Quermia system

 * Nominated by: 501st  dogma ( talk ) 11:40, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:As I was bored and couldn't think of anything to nom, I decided to work on NaruHina's shedscorcher.

(1 ECs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Thanks for helping out! NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:07, September 1, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  14:25, September 7, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) Tinwe (comlink) 11:12, September 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) August noms gooo away! Winterz (talk) 18:02, October 6, 2012 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Enthusiasm!
 * 2) * "The Mandalorians Neo-Crusaders, who were invading the Galactic Republic via three routes as a part of the Mandalorian Wars, a conflict fought between the two sides, triumphed.&hellip;" This is apositive withing an apositive. It needs breaking up.
 * 3) * "The battle in the Quermia system was only referenced in The Essential Atlas, released in 2009 and written by Daniel Wallace and Jason Fry." Double "and." Rephrase. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 21:56, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) **Both taken care of. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 23:28, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Just putting in dashes isn't going to cut it. They don't work like secondary commas. Now the apositive describing the Neo-Crusaders has no defined end point. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:32, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) ****Fixed. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 23:42, August 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 7) *****Cool beans. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:02, September 1, 2012 (UTC)

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