Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Vua Rapuung


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) Whoops. I nominated another character. Harrar 19:31, 13 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Goodwood  [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 23:27, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 08:43, 21 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:19, 27 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) More Jeedai heresy articles a must.  Graestan ( Talk ) 03:17, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Your Jeedai are no match for my Seeth!  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:50, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Nicely written, Harrar.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 14:40, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) Imperialles 19:33, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 2) * I hate to say it bud because I really like what you've done for it, but that intro should be tightened up a bit. Try removing some of the specifics and instead focusing on the broader picture of the character's life and dealings.
 * 3) **Yeah, I didn't think it would really work with a more important Yuuzhan Vong to be honest. It has been reshaped.
 * 4) * "as it was the famed warrior soon rose to the rank of commander" reads a little awkwardly. Perhaps break this clause off from the rest of the sentence and expand it a tad?
 * 5) **Addressed and rearranged.
 * 6) * The Consequences of love section could be broken up into at least two paragraphs for ease of reading.
 * 7) **Cut it up a good place. See what you think.
 * 8) * The first paragraph in the Return section could also be broken in half.
 * 9) **It is now broken.
 * 10) * "As the warriors at the base of the ramp closed in, Hul Rapuung called out to Solo, proclaiming that he would attain honor by killing the Jedi." -- Is that supposed to be Solo or Rapuung? It's been a long time since I read that book so your pardon if I'm wrong.
 * 11) **Re-read it&mdash;it's great! Hul does shout out to Anakin, telling him that it will be an honor to defeat the youngster in a duel. Vua is on the floor dying at this point, but he gets back up and defends Anakin.
 * 12) *TIMMMMBERRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 00:37, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks for looking through another one Goodwood! Harrar 20:16, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ***You're welcome, bud. Keep it up, you've got some talent there; experience will hone that talent.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 23:26, 16 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 16) * "On Yavin 4, where the headquarters of the New Jedi Order had been overrun by the Yuuzhan Vong in 26 ABY, Rapuung worked as a Shamed One, with Mezhan Kwaad, who he occasionally, rarely remembered with something less than hatred, only a short distance away in one of the damuteks planted on the world." Bit of a run-on here.
 * 17) **That was pretty unwieldy! I rearranged it.
 * 18) * A bit of context on Solo's broken lightsaber would be good. (How it was broken.)
 * 19) **In the Aiding Solo section (end of 1st paragraph) I included a little mdash bit which explains it.
 * 20) *Other than, this is another example of the good, well-planned, well-written noms we've come to expect and relish from you. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:10, 20 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) **Thanks! Sadly I'm gonna take a Wookieevacation&mdas;I'm addicted&mdash;until I've done my summer exams (long term revision etc), but after that I'll have five months of nothingness and can work my way through the NJO articles! Harrar 21:40, 20 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) ***We'll miss seeing your noms, but good luck with your RL articles and hopefully we'll see you soon. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 08:43, 21 January 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 20:28, 8 February 2008 (UTC)
 * The Kyle Katarn of the Yuuzhan Vong! His page was woefully inadequate when I arrived; I hope it isn't now too bloated&mdash;there's a lot to say though. Harrar 19:31, 13 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Btw, I know that the intro is massive; what I did though was write the article then condense its general content and "thesis" into the introduction; thus it's very much a mini, un-ornamented (?) version of the article. I can re-write it if people wish. Harrar 18:30, 14 January 2008 (UTC)
 * For the future, Harrar, avoid putting periods at the end of quote attribution lines. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:28, 21 January 2008 (UTC)