Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Ado Eemon


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Ado Eemon

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:19, May 30, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ...

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Imperators II (Talk) 20:10, June 6, 2011 (UTC)


 * 1) -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  14:42, June 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * I missed something.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  12:56, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) ~  Savage  BOB sig.png 20:55, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) Menkooroo 06:58, June 15, 2011 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Exiled Jedi
 * 2) * You should probably directly mention (and link) that he was a male in the body of the article. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  20:11, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) **Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:00, June 3, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) *I am going to look it over one more time before supporting.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  19:25, June 3, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) Imperators II
 * 6) * Is it specified whether his "private fleet of gunships" consisted of the Heavy Missile Platforms? If it is, "the" is necessary.  Imperators II (Talk) 18:42, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) **It is specified, but what "the" do you mean?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:16, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * 8) Bob
 * 9) * "Ado Eemon was the male silken-tongued ruler[1] of the Mid Rim[2] planet Caramm V during the Clone Wars.." I think you are trying to cram too much information into one sentence here. The way this is worded, it sounds like Caramm V had more than one ruler, like a female one, or one who wasn't silken-tongued. I'd suggest saying something like "Ado Eemon was the ruler of..." and then listing the maleness and smooth-talking bits later.
 * 10) **Reworded.
 * 11) * Can you find a synonym for "gunship" for at least one of the uses?
 * 12) **Varied.
 * 13) * "beautiful" is POV. Can you attribute this assessment to someone or a group? Otherwise, beautiful article. :) ~ Savage  BOB sig.png 05:27, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 14) **Is it still POV if a source exlicitely tells it so. That's the case here. Thanks for the beautiful review.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:35, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 15) ***Not if you say, "So-and-so considered the world beautiful." But apparently not the case here. ~ Savage  BOB sig.png 21:57, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 16) *** Whoops; I thought you had taken care of the POV issue, but it remains. ~ Savage  BOB sig.png 22:35, June 9, 2011 (UTC)
 * 17) ****I thought that too. Killed now.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:23, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 18) Exiled Jedi
 * 19) * You need to mention Star Wars: Complete Cross-Sections in the behind the scenes section. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  12:56, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 20) **Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:23, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 21) * And also take care of the POV problem. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  12:56, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
 * 22) **Killed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:23, June 10, 2011 (UTC)