Wookieepedia:Good article nominations



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What is a Good article?
A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.

A Good article has the following attributes.

1. It is well written. In this respect:


 * (a) it has compelling prose, and is readily comprehensible to non-specialist readers;
 * (b) it follows a logical structure, introducing the topic and then grouping together its coverage of related aspects; where appropriate, it contains a succinct lead section summarizing the topic, and the remaining text is organized into a system of hierarchical sections (particularly for longer articles);
 * (c) it follows the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies;
 * (d) necessary technical terms or jargon are briefly explained in the article itself, or an active link is provided.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable. In this respect:


 * (a) it provides references to any and all sources used for its material;
 * (b) sources should be selected in accordance with the guidelines for reliable sources;
 * (c) it contains no elements of original research.

3. It is broad in its coverage, addressing all major aspects of the topic (this requirement is slightly weaker than the "comprehensiveness" required by WP:FA, and allows shorter articles and broad overviews of large topics to be listed);.

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy. In this respect:


 * (a) viewpoints are represented fairly and without bias;
 * (b) all significant points of view are fairly presented, but not asserted, particularly where there are or have been conflicting views on the topic.

5. It is stable, i.e., it does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.

6. It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic. In this respect:


 * (a) the images are properly sourced and have succinct and descriptive captions;
 * (b) a lack of images does not in itself prevent an article from achieving Good Article status.

Nomination of Good articles
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all six requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Lady Tarkin

 * Nominated by: Ozzel 01:18, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: That's what I'm Tarkin about. -- Ozzel 01:15, 8 September 2008 (UTC)

(+6)
Support Object
 * 1) Darth Star... DC 15:57, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Colinmcev 05:12, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Good show. 15:11, 11 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) An interesting read.  Aqua  Unasi  03:04, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Soresumakashi 07:06, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Enjoyed it... where's she now? Easy88 19:11, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) POV-ish header: "Megonite megalomaniac." --Imperialles 01:20, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) She the proceeded her banquet hall to host the Imperial Diplomatic Conclave, for guests such as Shea Hublin, Chancellor Qua of the Zenox Star Cluster, the Most High Proctor of Thebeon 8, and Darth Vader himself. By this do you mean She then proceeded to her banquet hall to host the Imperial Diplomatic Conclave for guests such as Shea Hublin, Chancellor Qua of the Zenox Star Cluster, the Most High Proctor of Thebeon 8 and Darth Vader himself? Soresumakashi 09:23, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) *Indeed. Fixed. -- Ozzel 11:02, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Darth Star? Is this like a mistake or joke or something of that sort? =D DC 12:10, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I think that was the original name. :-p Nah, I typed that once and then was clumsy enough to copy it, and then I didn't catch either one. -- Ozzel 21:39, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 7) * The intro is a bit confusing with which Tarkin is being referenced.
 * 8) **Addressed. -- Ozzel 08:44, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) *"Her fate is unknown". This must die on sight.
 * 10) **I'll think about this one some more. -- Ozzel 08:44, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:52, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) Nice job with this, and cool subject. A few suggestions... -- Colinmcev 02:56, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * Could you try rewording "Lady Tarkin was the cousin of Commander Conan Motti—and it was for the connection to her powerful relatives such as he that Wilhuff Tarkin married the woman." You already mentioned the Motti family in the previous sentence, so perhaps something like "Wilhuff Tarkin married her due to her powerful family connections, such as her cousin, Commander Conan Motti" or something like that? -- Colinmcev 02:56, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) **Done. -- Ozzel 08:44, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * I don't feel strongly about this objection, but I'm not sure this needs to be in the behind the scenes: "Also, no source has yet indicated whether or not she was aware of her husband's affair with Natasi Daala." -- Colinmcev 02:56, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) **I wouldn't be crushed if it was removed, but I thought it was worth noting because it's a pretty major part of her character that we don't know. If she didn't know about Daala, then she was just blindly devoted to Wilhuff, but if she did, then that puts a different spin on things. And since the Biography was written with the knowledge of Daala, someone might just assume that she knew, so I thought it was best to make it clear that we don't know either way. -- Ozzel 08:44, 22 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) ***Fair enough. -- Colinmcev 05:12, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) Toprawa:
 * 19) *I'm failing to see any compelling connection between Lady Tarkin and the last bit of the second paragraph of the first subsection. Unless you can directly connect this back to Lady Tarkin somehow, I would remove this: "In 5 BBY, when Lady Tarkin's brother-in-law Gideon Tarkin was killed during the Erhynradd Mutiny, his daughter Rivoche was invited to come live at the Tarkin estate; however, the teenage Rivoche frequently acted out in resentment, so Wilhuff had her sent to an exclusive preparatory academy on Clær."
 * 20) **Understandable. It's vague because there is no specific mention Lady Tarkin in that source. But since she was married to Willy, she would have been there when they took in Rivoche and been part of that whole ordeal. I just can't saying anything in particular about Lady Tarkin there, because it's not in the source. -- Ozzel 22:14, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) **I guess I'm going to avoid making this an objection for the time being, but remind me again why this article is under "Lady Tarkin" and not something more befitting of our naming conventions, such as Tarkin (Lady)? Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:37, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Because we have a template for such cases specifically so that we don't have to resort to the parenthetical stuff. -- Ozzel 22:14, 17 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 03:03, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination Comments: I think it may finally be ready... NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 03:03, 25 August 2008 (UTC)

(+2)
Support
 * 1) I strongly feel that this is a good nomination. KotOR's article page was in something of shambles several months ago with a badly written, inconsistently tensed synopsis, revealing of plot details at the beginning, etc. The fact of the matter is though, a large amount of improvement has been done since then and it is a much better article than it was then. While I don't think it's worthy of featured article status, I definitely see it as worthy of being a "good article." Niirfa-sa 23:58, 5 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) After all my grammatical nit-picking, I think it's of GA standard. Soresumakashi 06:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose **A specialist —either a normal Republic soldier, scout, or scoundrel. Suggest changing specialist and all other cases of it to player instead. There should be no space between specialist and the mdash. 22:32, 17 September 2008 (UTC) **The padawan then follows this map to a krayt dragon's cave and assisted a local hunter, Komad Fortuna, in killing it. Assisted should be assists. **The party baits, finds the beast, and kills it, retrieved the blade from its hide. Suggest rephrasing **The party was leaving the base with droid in hand when they were confronted by Selkath authorities with reports of shots fired within the embassy. Was should be is and were should be are. *Revelation aboard the Leviathan **''The potential students of the academy prove their worth by performing various tasks and gaining prestige. Some of the challenges are martial in nature while others were mental, but all require a certain commitment to the Sith ideals''. Prove should be proved, are should be were and require should be required. **Revan discovers the Rakatans were divided into several tribes. Were should be are. **Revan was able to break Bastila's resolve and persuaded her to turn back to the light. Was should be is and persuaded should be persuades. Yay! I'm done! Have fun fixing the article! Soresumakashi 10:41, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) An excess of redlinks and the synopsis needs to be written in present tense.  Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 14:14, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *There is no limit towards how many redlinks can be in a GA. DC 15:50, 25 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Additionally, in-universe articles are to be written in past tense, per the Manual of Style. // ~mikah~  01:44, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) **Redlinks I was wrong about then, but a synopsis is always written in present tense. Look at the film articles. Drewton  [[Image:Era-old.png|20px]] ( Drewton's Holocron ) 13:49, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Again, directly from the Manual of Style itself, "All in-universe articles should be in past tense, per 'A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away...'" Only out-of-universe articles (ie, George Lucas, John Williams) should be written in present tense. Despite whatever tense the film articles are written in, if its not past tense, its wrong. // ~mikah~  14:09, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ****This is not an in-universe article. Stylistically, plot summaries for anything almost anywhere are in the present tense&mdash;the MoS doesn't contradict this in any way, because this is an OOU article. "In contrast, articles about books, movies, games, or other real-life Star Wars material should obviously be written from an out-of-universe perspective, but should still be noted as such." Our OOU FAs also use this system, and so should this article. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:20, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) *****I see what you mean now, I misread what I was reading. So that would be a prominent problem with the article. I'll go ahead and try to fix as much as I can for now. And sorry about the confusion, Drewton. // ~mikah~  14:27, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ******Fixed NaruHina  Talk[[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 03:59, 30 August 2008 (UTC)
 * There is no mention I can see that the soundtrack was composed by Jeremy Soule --Jinzler 09:33, 31 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Addressed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 06:39, 1 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) This does sound kind of strict, but these are meant to be a showcase of our very best articles, so here goes:
 * Trapped on Taris
 * on the Hammerhead-class capital ship, the Endar Spire. Hammerhead should be in italics.
 * When the player wakes, Carth informs him of the situation and that they needed to find and rescue Bastila, whose escape pod had crash-landed somewhere on the planet. Needed should be need and had should be has.
 * and the slums of Lower City. Of Lower City should be of the Lower City.
 * impose a security lock down. Lock down is and should be one word.
 * that has been stolen from them by the Vulkars. Has should be had.
 * Ironically, when they found her. Found should be find.
 * Zaalbar has been captured. Has should be had.
 * The group venture into the sewers, the trio track down and rescue Zaalbar from the slavers. Suggest rephrasing.
 * They Raid the Vulkar Base. Raid should not be capitalized.
 * Afterwards, they return to Gadon and the Beks, they stay the night before going to the swoop race the next morning. Suggest rephrasing
 * At the swoop race, the neophyte racer manages to win the race. Could we just say that the player won the race? There are too many uses of race, and neophyte is a bad word.
 * Before he could accept his prize however, Brejik broke the deal at the last moment, claiming the player has cheated by using the prototype accelerator. Could should be can and broke should be breaks.
 * Bastila breaks free and a fight ensued. Ensued should be ensues.
 * Brejik and his Vulkar thugs could not defeat them and die in the lightfight. Lightfight is defined as a fight where both sides use blasters. Bastila was using a double vibro and we don't know what Revan used. And the sentence needs a full stop. Basic grammar here.
 * Canderous recommends the leader of the party to Davik for hire as a ploy. Last I heard, a ploy was a gambit.
 * It can also mean "trick." NaruHina  Talk
 * Other than that, fixed. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 23:31, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Second Star Map: Tatooine
 * As he and the others left the cave. Left should be leave.
 * Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 22:15, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Third Star Map: Kashyyyk
 * As a reward for their aid, Freyyr gives his only surviving son Bacca's Ceremonial Blade and allows him to come out of exile and was no longer branded a madclaw. Suggest rephrasing.
 * Shortly thereafter, the Wookiees of the village united under their new chieftain, Freyyr, and rebelled against Czerka with the aid of the party. United should be Unite and rebelled should be rebel.
 * Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 22:32, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Fourth Star Map: Manaan
 * The two were the only Human scientists still alive and were trapped in the facility. Both were's should be ares
 * the padawan persuades them to tell him what they knew. Knew should be know.
 * which was responsible for the Selkath's insanity. Was should be is.
 * Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 23:07, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * For every question he answers incorrectly, Bastila was tortured. Was should be is.
 * Meanwhile the padawan's pick is able to infiltrate the Leviathan. Suggest rewording padawan's pick.
 * Seeing nothing else that they could do. Could should be can.
 * Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 22:32, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Fifth Star Map: Korriban
 * Are you sure that should be in past tense? NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 22:09, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Sorry, my mistake. Both are acceptable. Soresumakashi 06:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Crash-landing on an unknown world
 * Though he was required to enter alone, Juhani and Jolee, after receiving a vision that warned them that Revan was in danger, joined him at the last minute against the Elders' protests. Warned should be warn, both was and was should be is and is. Joined should be join.
 * They had the vision before which showed them that Revan is in danger.
 * Revan and the others joined the Republic's assault on the Star Forge. Joined should be join.
 * Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 22:51, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * The Star Forge
 * Fixed NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 22:09, 17 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm pretty sure the excess redlink template should be at the top of the article, as per wookieepedia's page layout policies. Soresumakashi 06:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Moved NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|20px]] 21:07, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Q-series droideka

 * Nominated by: -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 01:28, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination Comments: Attempt #2. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 01:28, 27 August 2008 (UTC)

(+1)
Support
 * 1) Seems good to me, somebody else might spot something, but at the moment I can't see anything, nice article. - Kingpin13Cantina Battle Ground 18:31, 27 August 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the homework strewn Aqua Unasi
 * 2) *After my quick read through, it's a very good article, and for me the only issue is with the sourcing for it. It's tricky with it being a very similar variant of the droideka. It appears the sources and appearances list contains onones that specifically state Q-series Droideka, which is good. My question is, is there still information about droidekas in general in the article?
 * 3) ** For example, there's the information in the article taken from Suvivor's Quest'. I just read Survivor's Quest and is the Q-series specifically in there? I don't believe so, plus Survivor's Quest is not on the appearances list. I would go through and make sure you only talk about what is known about the Q-series, not talking about things known just about the droideka in general.
 * 4) **Also, some things about the characteristics of the Q-series. Is it anywhere stated that all of the physical aspects of it were the same as the droidekas, or something like only this one thing is different and the rest are the same as other droidekas? It may very well be, but if it's not said, characteristics based solely off the droideka may have to be removed. Example: the height 1.83 meters in the infobox might not be able to be sourced by something referring only to droidekas unless you have proof that their characteristics are the same.
 * 5) *A good article and nice work - once these things are sorted through I'll support, though I may come back after looking at it with more detail. :P  Aqua  Unasi  18:42, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Yeah, I see what you're saying. This is tricky business indeed here. While I can't find a specific source that says the Q-series had everything the original had, a simple comparison of the pictures shows this. Since this model is a variant of the original droideka, I believe the same facts regarding the original model should be allowed in the article unless a specific source states otherwise (e.g. that the Q-series were not 1.83 meters). -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 22:40, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Hm, I see what you are saying too. Any other users' opinoins on this?  Aqua  Unasi  02:23, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, I'd like other users' opinions on this, but since no one has replied, I think that we should stick with what we solidly know about the Q-series, and not assume from other things. Also, my objection about the Survivor's Quest info still stands.  Aqua  Unasi  22:56, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
 * The reason I'm reluctant to remove info about the droideka is because it'll make the article so much shorter, when it really doesn't need to be. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 20:35, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Well if the info from Survivor's Quest isn't even about the Q-series droideka, then yes, it does need to be taken out.  Aqua  Unasi  20:43, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * It is about the Q-series droideka. The information talks about droidekas being sold to the corporate sector; and all droidekas produced after RotS were Q-series (Revenge of the Sith: Incredible Cross Sections).
 * And where, exactly, is the evidence that this particular droideka was constructed after RotS? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:27, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Its first appearance was in RotS, which is one piece of evidence, and this was proven in RotS: ICS. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 16:44, 13 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I mean the particular droids in Survivor's Quest. They could've been pre Q-series models. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:59, 13 September 2008 (UTC)
 * You're right; Survivor's Quest information removed. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 10:52, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Also, if you do have this evidence, it should probably be explained in a footnote so people can know that's how the information was gathered.  Aqua  Unasi  21:43, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *You still need to handle the objections you failed to address the first time around, found here. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:26, 29 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Okay, I've just addressed your objection relating to the eras. I'll deal with Ackbar's objection later. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)  (Chow) 15:15, 30 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Same as last time; everything I said still applies. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:27, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Battle of the TIE Fighter Construction Facility

 * Nominated by: DjMack
 * Nomination comments: This would be my first real good article I wrote entirely by myself, just point out to me anything that needs fixing, I want to be criticized and become a better writer. SPOILERS FOR FORCE UNLEASHED, BEWARE.

(+3)
Support
 * 1) Good work. --Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 11:02, 1 September 2008 (UTC)
 * :)  Aqua  Unasi  19:11, 1 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) DC 21:17, 2 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the post-it of DC
 * 2) * Indecisive victory? For who?
 * 3) *You need an aftermath section for the battle.
 * 4) *This article was fantastic, DjMack, it was very well written. DC 18:09, 30 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Aqua Unasi
 * 6) *Great article. Very well written indeed. A few things:
 * 7) ** You need an tag.
 * 8) ** A few things are unsourced: The first paragraph of Prelude, The two paragraphs in the Aftermath section, and a few things in the infobox.
 * 9) **Also, I went in and changed these for you, but a thing to remember for future articles is to put a tag on the article when nominating it. Also, don't forget to link to your references, and that they go immediately after punctuation, with no space between.
 * 10) *I hope to see more articles from you in the future! :)  Aqua  Unasi  19:27, 30 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) *One more thing - it looks like some things have been added into the infobox and aren't sourced. The thing about the hijacked AT-ST, the AT-ST in the casualties, and the outcome need referencing.
 * 12) **Also, you have the first paragraph of prelude referenced by "Hasbro". Can this be more specific? Is there a website article, interview, or what?  Aqua  Unasi  20:29, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) Xadún's Dun Moch:
 * 14) *Quotes?
 * 15) *A few linking issues. Remember, once in the intro and the first appearence in the main body.
 * 16) *Intro - "raised in the dark" makes it sound like Vader kept him in a small cupboard without light. Say he was was trained in the Dark Side and the Emperor knew nothing of him. that would be sufficient.
 * 17) *Does the novel not give any specifics for the battle of duel? particular strikes, sequences of fighting etc would make the duel section far better.
 * 18) *"He would spend his time in various bars, before Starkiller found him and asked for his help to gather the enemies of the Empire." Did Starkiller just want information or help to actually get the Rebels all in one place? what was this plan?
 * 19) **Starkiller wanted to gather the enemies of the empire together. DjMack 02:23, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Does Starkiller execute a plan in the game? if so, a link to this battle please, even if it doesn't exist yet. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 08:25, 14 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *Not bad. Nice to see somone working on Battle GA's. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 13:27, 10 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Oh, next time you nominate something that recently came out, just make sure to say that there are spoilers. DC 18:04, 30 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I added everything. DjMack 01:47, 31 August 2008 (UTC)

Recon-PK series droid

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 01:59, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: WTS series resumes.

(+5)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:39, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Great job.  Ifindyourlackoffaithdisturbing  ( Oya Manda! ) 22:54, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 08:19, 3 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Probably one of my favorite WTS... don't really know why.  Aqua  Unasi  20:58, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Soresumakashi 07:24, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments

Teyora Rekab

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 08:52, 6 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: If only I were writing about coolth suits.

(+4)
Support
 * 1) I can't see anything wrong, except from the Harry Potter toy glasses and fish bowl ;D. (One thing actually, did you spell makeup right? (I think it's spelt make-up in English.)) - Kingpin13Cantina Battle Ground 10:53, 6 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Do we get a coolth suit GAN to go with this? - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 14:07, 7 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Ifindyourlackoffaithdisturbing  ( Oya Manda! ) 01:30, 8 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ozzel 19:19, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Darth Nikolai 06:33, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments

Jarell

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:36, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ... if there is one at all.

(+4)
Support
 * 1) That was quick :D Great piece - Kingpin13Cantina Battle Ground 13:15, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Graestan ( Talk ) 15:26, 14 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Vive all species GAs! Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 19:50, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Soresumakashi 12:03, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1)  Kingpin :
 * 2) * Seems good, just two things. Firstly, could you reword the start of “Biology and appearance”, I don’t understand if they can have all three colours or if they can have just one (or both). I see in the image it’s purple and white but please reword.
 * 3) **Rewritten - hopefully it's clearer now.
 * 4) * Secondly shouldn’t the “Sources” section be renamed “Appearances”? Otherwise a great article. - Kingpin13Cantina Battle Ground 12:57, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **No, since the Jarell do not appear in a narrative piece of work. Information from The DarkStryder Campaign is all behind the scenes bio information, and the Vision of the Future reference is to the language only. They do not technically "appear" in those works. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 13:11, 10 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa:
 * 7) *The first concern I have after perusing the article is that you alternate between pluralizing them as "the Jarell" and "Jarells." Are you sure that either/or is correct? Can we not choose one for consistency? Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:05, 24 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Juno Eclipse

 * Nominated by: Darth Nikolai 06:20, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: New, but maybe it cuts the mustard? Spoilers for The Force Unleashed

(+1)
Support
 * 1) Well put together article, reads really well, well thought out. I would give it a go. I'm amazed at how quickly it was put together as well.Easy88 13:31, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Lol, well I may be a *tad* obsessed with her. 0:-)Darth Nikolai 15:14, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *Unfortunately, I'm going to have to cite Rule 5, instability, for this one. With TFU at the height of its popularity right now so close to the game's release, this article is going to be magnet for newcomers to the site, and its content is going to fluctuate constantly and greatly from day to day. Maybe wait a few months when the TFU fervor has died down. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:00, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Incidentally, it's currently protected (I don't know why, it was like that when I rewrote it) New comers aren't going to be able to go crazy with it and the content has remained almost entirely as it was written two days after the novel was released. just not quite sure that's a viable argument.

Comments
 * If you're going to nominate an article from a recently released source, please indicate that it has spoilers to warn potential readers who have not yet read the source material. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 07:15, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Sorry. Darth Nikolai 15:14, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * No worries - we just had a similar situation with a nomination further up the page. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:16, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

Brolsam

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:21, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I'm wondering if ...

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Support
 * 1) I just...  Aqua  Unasi  12:43, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) But I&hellip; Graestan ( Talk ) 00:17, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Soresumakashi 05:47, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Same as my Torize objection. Soresumakashi 11:37, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Varied it more. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 23:23, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa:
 * 4) *I do have some concern over the infobox picture. It doesn't really illustrate anything about the planet. It's just a dot on a map. If you're going to keep the infobox picture, at least include a scaled back version of that map that gives some geographical context to where the planet lies in relation to other planets, hyperlanes, etc.
 * 5) *As brief as the information is, I'd like to see the bits that discuss the planet's culture found in the "Description" section incorporated into an "Inhabitants" section, per the Layout Guide.
 * 6) *Likewise, the geographical information in the "Locations" section should at least be duplicated/merged into the "Descriptions" section. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:23, 24 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Love the infobox picture ;)  Aqua  Unasi  12:43, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

Torize

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:21, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ... anyone is getting sick ...

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Support
 * 1) ...might possibly...  Aqua  Unasi  12:43, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) &hellip;can't get&hellip; Graestan ( Talk ) 00:22, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Soresumakashi 05:47, 22 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) In 8 ABY, following the breakdown of Imperial authority following the liberation of Kal'Shebbol. Following occurs too many times. Suggest rewording one. Soresumakashi 11:31, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Varied it more. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 23:23, 20 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * A question though, what exactly is an "original adventure"?
 * An original adventure is one that is designed solely by the Gamemaster for use within their campaigns, possibly using elements introduced in the supplement. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 13:03, 15 September 2008 (UTC)

Oon Tien

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:21, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ... of all these noms yet?

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Support
 * 1) ...be :)  Aqua  Unasi  12:43, 15 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) &hellip;enough! :D Graestan ( Talk ) 00:27, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Soresumakashi 01:08, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:54, 23 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Sarne protected the system by at least two dozen IPV-1 System Patrol Craft, a full wing of TIE fighters, and hundreds of proton mines. Should by be with? Soresumakashi 12:25, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **Yes. Changed. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:30, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments

Kurt

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281  [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 12:47, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments:Haven't been by here in a while&hellip;

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Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 20:09, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:27, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Soresumakashi 01:08, 20 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Humans (first sentence) should be capitalized. Soresumakashi 12:16, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed. Thank you for looking. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 23:54, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

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Fohargh

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:59, 17 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: What the hey.

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Support
 * 1) Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 19:14, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) I'd like to see the first sentence in the Bio about his origins cleaned up to avoid using the "little is known" phrasing. Admittedly, that's not what you used, but it's close enough to warrant a change, IMO.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:07, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed. Thank you for looking Chack, if anything else is necessary, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:24, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
 * 4) * Not really an objection, but is it possible to get an image or two in the article? One of Bane perhaps, and maybe a generic Makurth image?
 * 5) **Added a generic makurth image, but I feel a Bane one is inappropriate, since we have no images of bane from that point in his life. —Tommy9281  [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 14:49, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Fair enough. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 19:14, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ****I don't know about adding just a generic pic. It just doesn't seem right. Are there any GA/FAs with similar situations? If not, I'd suggest using an image of Bane.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:42, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *****I agree with Chack, but, I am perfectly fine with doing whatever the consensus is. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 23:46, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 10) *Is Moltok actually mentioned as his homeworld in DBPoDaNotOR? I only ask because it's not in Moltok's sources/appearances. If it isn't mentioned, then it should be removed from the infobox and the bit about the Makurth in the bio would need to be sourced (and, thus, the whole article).
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) *I find the "First encounter with Bane" section to read like it might in Bane's bio. I know it's probably written from Bane's POV in DBPoDaNotOR, but I'd like to see you try to tell it more from Forhargh's POV.
 * 13) *"So consumed by his dark side filled rage, Bane overpowered his quarry with the Force as he writhed about, and Fohargh clutched at his throat in futile attempts to free himself from Bane's invisible grasp." This reads a tad too flowerly; I'd like it altered a little to read less like a narrative.
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) **Interesting character, if somewhat two-dimensional. Good work. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:43, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Why not just send this straight to FAN? --Eyrezer 22:47, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Just cause, I currently have alot going on on the FAN, so I figured I'd send this one and the next through the GAN first. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:24, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

First Duel in the Iron Citadel

 * Nominated by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:59, 17 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: None.

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Support

Oppose
 * 1) Can we just use lightsaber duels instead of contests of strength? It's more direct, and besides, duels aren't all about strength. Soresumakashi 12:01, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The next use of the word "duel" would be six words away (which happens to lead into the title), and would then disrupt the prose. I've never seen a duel that ended with tea and biscuits either;P I would ask you to reconsider please. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:06, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Still, not too happy about it, but okay, I guess no-one (except me) will really notice. Soresumakashi 00:59, 20 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I understand your position, and I am not adverse to altering my bladework on the next duel article. Thank you for looking. If anything else is required, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 13:21, 20 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Before I review it, this article appears to be well over 1,000 words. Any reason it's not nominated for FA rather than GA? - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 10:42, 18 September 2008 (UTC)

Domaz

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One''' ( Squadron channel ) 10:02, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Okay - this is a bit of a test. As far as I know, this is the first city GAN, so all criticism is welcomed.

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Support
 * 1) I think Tope's got a city FA.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:44, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Soresumakashi 01:08, 20 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) *Assisting in relief efforts in and around the city are one of the players first tasks in the adventure. Should are be is? In any case, players should be apostrophized.  Soresumakashi 11:56, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **"Are" should probably be "is" - the grammar settings on Word agree with you. Changed. As for the apostrophe - no it shouldn't. "Players" is plural, referring to more than one individual. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:27, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Even if it is plural, it still should be players', because it is referring to ownership of the relief task. Soresumakashi 12:36, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Argh. I misunderstood where you meant about the placement. Changed. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:54, 19 September 2008 (UTC)

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