Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Amber Comark


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Amber Comark

 * Nominated by Cull Tremayne 23:14, April 18, 2010 (UTC):
 * Nomination comments Spice-addicted hero:

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:49, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:57, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:47, May 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) This was great. —Tommy  9281 04:34, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Let's see how it goes. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:20, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Thefourdotelipsis 11:04, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Cav:
 * 2) * Intro - two sentences immediately following one another use the phrasing "native to the Core Worlds" and "Native to Chandrila". Any chance of changing the wording or merging the sentences to avoid repetition? - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:52, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Varied up the wording. Cull Tremayne 17:53, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Xicer
 * 5) * Could you redlink Comark family in the article? Creating a page for it would be even better, but a redlink would be sufficient.
 * 6) **Done and done.
 * 7) * Imperial socialite: "&hellip;Comark resolved to take up where her friend had left off, taking up the mantle of "Tigress" and&hellip;" "Take up" and "taking up" is repetitive, could you vary the wording here?
 * 8) **Changed the second "taking up" to "assuming".
 * 9) *And that's it, great work. We need more articles covering obscure AJ stories. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 18:32, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Thanks for the review. :D Cull Tremayne 05:53, May 19, 2010 (UTC)