Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Montross


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Montross

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 08:16, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The voice of Clancy Brown compels you.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:38, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 13:42, 17 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Excellent. The lack of images is a bit jarring, but since it's a console-only game, understandable. Thefourdotelipsis 10:45, 27 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:02, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:10, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Very Crowded Desk of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "When a young boy called Jango Fett joined the Mandalorians and became like a son to Mereel, Montross grew enraged at Mereel's favoritism and contemptuous of Fett." This sentence just reads awkwardly to me.
 * 3) * You use "supposedly" twice in the first sentence of the second paragraph.
 * 4) * "When they arrived, the resistance proved not to be minimal." Too corny, IMO.
 * 5) * How did Sebolto kill himself?
 * 6) * You start two consecutive sentences with "as" in the same paragraph.
 * 7) *Mandos were better before Traviss.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) **Resolved all of those. Except Traviss. :P - Lord Hydronium 10:46, 25 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 10) * "Montross shooting down stragglers as they retreated" Clarify whose stragglers are being shot here.
 * 11) * "Fett led them to the closest town to his family's farm, where the Mandalorians expected Vizsla to go to resupply;" Reword/clarify.
 * 12) * "Mereel followed and ordered Montross to abort his run and do the same." Followed where?
 * 13) * "Upon arriving, though, they were ambushed by the Death Watch, who had in fact hired the Mandalorians to lure them into a trap. " Clarify Death Watch involvement, please.
 * 14) * "Montross had personal contempt of Fett, considering him a child and believing him to be a coward, but as an opportunist, he also believed that Mereel's attachment would interfere with his picking of a successor." Reword/Clarify.
 * 15) *Fascinating BTS. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:43, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) **All resolved. - Lord Hydronium 02:33, 17 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 18) * "becoming like a son to Mereel" &mdash; this reads a bit awkwardly; please revise.
 * 19) * "who told the true story of Mereel's death" &mdash; to whom? This could be clarified some.
 * 20) * The intro says that Montross killed Rozatta, but this is not made clear in the bio &mdash; it merely says that he told Fett she was still alive.
 * 21) * "However, Montross was a coward" &mdash; fairly blatant POV. Please state who thought him to be a coward, or, if that info doesn't exist, reword it to be a bit milder.
 * 22) * "Fett considered Montross to be the hardest opponent he had ever faced" &mdash; I think Mace Windu might have changed Fett's opinion on the matter. I would suggest adding an "as of 27 BBY" or something to the end of the sentence.
 * 23) * What's the holdup on the images? I'd rather they were added before this is passed.
 * 24) **Good work. Very interesting character and BtS. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:10, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 26) * "Before leaving, Montross planted thermal charges around the station. Fett escaped the trap, learning from the dying Rozatta where Montross had gone." The detonators were to trap Fett I assume.
 * 27) **Yeah. Cleared up.
 * 28) * Bill Bailey was cast as Montross? At 12 years old? I suspect you might mean another Bill Bailey. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:03, 1 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) **I didn't link that. :P It's removed now. - Lord Hydronium 19:16, 1 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments


 * Images are coming. The infobox image will get replaced with a headshot when that happens, too. - Lord Hydronium 08:16, 21 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Because it's been about two months since I first wrote this, I should explain. I need a few screenshots from the game, but since it's a console game not many can get those, and the guy who was getting them seems to be MIA. So in short, I don't know when images will arrive. Even if this passed without them, though, it would be a year before it got on the front page anyway, and I would hope that something could be done within a year. - Lord Hydronium 18:41, 28 August 2008 (UTC)