Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Laddinare Torbin


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(6 Inqs/1 User/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:11, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Objections resolved over IRC. The Inq shall never relinquish their powah! Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:09, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 18:32, 20 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) NNOOO-body exPECTs the Imperial Inquisition! --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:43, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Graestan ( Talk ) 21:23, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Thefourdotelipsis 13:09, 24 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:32, 26 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Just one thing.
 * 2) * "Torbin, fearing for his life, wrested the air tubes from several other beings, one of which was his own bodyguard." This quote, in the second-to-last paragraph of Assassination is very similar to the quote in P&T. Please change the phrasing a bit.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:36, 22 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fixed. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:51, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 5) * "hunt down the Jedi, whom Torbin once served alongside, and who were still alive during the Great Jedi Purge." – Implies that the whole Order was still intact.
 * 6) * "he also commanded over a dozen lesser Inquisitors" – Was the Inquisitorius not structured in a way that, as Grand Inquisitor, Torbin would command all the lesser Inquisitors?
 * 7) * "Imperial enemies" can imply enemies who are Imperial, which is not correct in this instance.
 * 8) * Using the same phrase "elicit a confession" in the prose after supplying it in a quote is a bit repetitive.
 * 9) * The First Great Schism and the Legions of Lettow need a bit of context.
 * 10) * "among the more unpopular among the ranks" – Could be smoothed out.
 * 11) * Graestan ( Talk ) 02:06, 23 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Should be all sorted. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:51, 23 April 2008 (UTC)

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