Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Peshk Vri'syk


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Peshk Vri'syk

 * Nominated by: -- Colinmcev 05:28, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination Comments: Another X-wing Bothan... -- Colinmcev 05:28, 7 August 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 08:11, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 04:08, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 11:31, 29 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:08, 29 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 12:59, 10 September 2008 (UTC)

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 * I think the first two sentences of the intro need to be reworkd. They sseem to repeat themselves. Also, are there any quotes said by Peshk himself? --Eyrezer 06:17, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I think the only problem was repeating Rogue Squadron's name twice. I fixed it. Better? As for the quotes, there are literally NO quotes ever spoken by Peshk. It was hard enough finding things people said about him! lol -- Colinmcev 15:25, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I've edited it myself so that the BMA bit is not sandwiched between info on Rouge Squadron. Let me know if that's alright. --Eyrezer 04:21, 15 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Tis fine. -- Colinmcev 12:29, 15 August 2008 (UTC)
 * I'd like to see a minor addition to the last section. In Isard's Revenge, Wedge remembers Peshk among the pilots who've perished who were closest to him, along with Ibtisam and a few others. It shows that Wedge never forgot him, and that he was fond of him. Other than that, good work as usual on a marginal X-wing character. :-D -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:31, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Marginal X-wing character is my middle name! :D Added the reference; looks like it's still a few words shy of 1,000... -- Colinmcev 03:41, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
 * 2) * I'm not sure if linking the Bothan Combat Response Element is wise - there's no mention of it outside the DarkStryder Campaign as far as I know, and the only information given is that it is a Bothan fleet, under Bothan control, allied to the NR. The exact form of attachment is currently unknown. Unless specifically refered to in Rogue Squadron, I would remove that link.
 * 3) **Ok. -- Colinmcev 23:22, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Did Vri'syk request the transfer, or was he put forward by the Bothans? - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 13:09, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **Checked back and couldn't find a specific answer, so I changed the wording to be more vague. -- Colinmcev 23:22, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Xadún's Dun Möch - as requested.
 * 7) * "...pilot Asyr Sei'lar, who was his equal when they were trained" - Do we know this for certain, or is it just a claim made Sei'lar?
 * 8) **I suppose it's just her own claim. Added that to the article. -- Colinmcev 06:53, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * "Bothan politicians, particularly Borsk Fey'lya of the New Republic Provisional Council, were pushing for a member of their species to be placed in Rogue Squadron due to the assistance Bothan spies provided the Rebel Alliance with the plans for the Death Star II, which ultimately led to the Imperial battle station's destruction." This sentence doens't make grammatical sense. Also, didn't the Feyl'lya or another Bothan want a Rogue squadron pilot because of the prestige of the squadron's name? I seem to recall the Bothan Council wanting a part of than legacy that came with Rogue Squadron. Correct me if I'm wrong.
 * 10) **All the references I've found in the book are Bothans using the Death Star II thing as the leverage to get a pilot into Rogue Squadron, in addition to the neutrality thing I mentioned. Didn't see anything about the Bothan Council. I reworded the sentence. -- Colinmcev 06:53, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * I think you should mention the fact Vri'syk flew an X-wing much earlier than the "Death" section - I recommend incorporating it into the line about being designated Rogue Two.
 * 12) ** Added it to the Rogue Squadron section. -- Colinmcev 06:53, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * Any references available to previous piloting experience available? E.g. the sorts of ships he flew At the Bothan Academy.
 * 14) ** Not in the source material that includes Peshk, so I don't think it would be appropriate to include. -- Colinmcev 06:53, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * Is Vri'syk not mentioned in the Bacta War? Since Sei'lar Takes over his position, I thought their might be another appearence. Since the Opening Bio quote is from The Krytos Trap, I was a little curious.
 * 16) ** He's not mentioned, I looked all over. And actually, I think she took over his position in Krytos Trap, not Bacta War, which explains the lack of a mention. -- Colinmcev 06:53, 19 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *I think this is better than Kre'fey. Keep up the good work, Col. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 08:48, 17 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) Toprawa:
 * 19) * Can we clarify/expand on this to explain why they were happy to see him after this mission? "and reacted apathetically to Horn after the Folor mission, while the other pilots were happy to see him." Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:18, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) **I added that. A reference to the targeting data thing is in the story already, but if you feel it needs any further clarification, let me know or feel free to reword yourself. -- Colinmcev 23:25, 28 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) ***It's fine. I just like for P/T sections, etc., to reiterate information that may already be in the bio. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:08, 29 August 2008 (UTC)

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