Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Kurth San

Kurth San

 * Nominated by: Jinzler 14:55, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A military officer

Support

 * 1) Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 17:44, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Jir Tramsig now? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:43, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Tisk on those who missed the couple of spelling errors in their reviews! :P Graestan ( Talk ) 15:26, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  15:36, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Very good. Thefourdotelipsis 07:53, June 3, 2010 (UTC)

Xicer

 * Bio: "Expecting an imminent full-scale, San devised a plan to evacuate the city&hellip;" There appears to be a word missing here. Attack? Invasion? Please fix.
 * Yup, there was a word missing, but not any more :) --Jinzler 17:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * P&T: "He was also very neat in his appearance, and was admired for this." Admired by who? Does the source specify, or is it left vague?
 * Unfortunately, the source does not specify this --Jinzler 17:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Bts: "&hellip;outlines were given for how the event staff could play to roles the various non-player characters in the scenario, including San. I'm not sure what this is trying to say, can you rephrase it?
 * Rephrased, hopefully it should make more sense now --Jinzler 17:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Otherwise, great work. It's nice to see a Living Force FA. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 17:00, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Cheers, we really should have more of these things --Jinzler 17:39, May 18, 2010 (UTC)

Farlstendoiro likes Living Force Campaign

 * "During the event, San operated an information stand for the Thaereian military, but didn't enjoy giving information people." I think this sentence is missing at least one word somewhere.
 * Rewrote --Jinzler 10:38, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm not really sure about the evacuation. San wanted to evacuate both troops and civilians from Soboll, right? Or maybe there were no civilians there? Maybe he wanted to evacuate some of the civilians there?
 * Clarified --Jinzler 10:38, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * History, the 4th paragraph's last sentence "He then went into his office" "He also activated". I might be dense this morning but, are you talking about San or about Tyeb?
 * Clarified --Jinzler 10:38, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * When you say that San spoke Tarasinese, you might specify that it was the language of the native species of Cularin.
 * Added --Jinzler 10:38, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Do RPGA had a canon ending for Soboll? You know those "tests" at the end of the adventure, that officially apply to further supplements and so.
 * As far as I know, there isn't one. Regardless of what happens, Soboll is eventually captured by the Cularin Militia, so I have mentioned that in the article --Jinzler 10:38, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:04, May 19, 2010 (UTC)

Few things

 * The RPG paragraph is a bit too PBP.
 * Reworded, see what you think of it now --Jinzler 17:53, May 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * "He was also very neat in his appearance, and was admired for this." Admired by whom?
 * This was actually one of my objections further up. Jinzler already mentioned that the source doesn't specify. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 01:49, May 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Otherwise fine.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:13, May 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review --Jinzler 17:53, May 30, 2010 (UTC)