Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/The Clone Wars: Covetous


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The Clone Wars: Covetous

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 18:01, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:It was harder than I expected.

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nice job, Kreivi. Grammar problems are fixed now, I couldn't find any anymore. --Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 12:30, December 30, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Minor but extensive grammar issues throughout the article. I seriously recommend finding a better way to fix this, as grammar is currently your main issue and the problem that the GAN shouldn't have to fix for nominators.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Ohhhh damn. Every time I think "now theres no bad grammar", someone comes and says that one little phrase. And I know it isn't your guys job to fix them. Sigh. I just have to learn to write better... But, for now, I ask only one thing: could you give me at least one example for the grammar issues of this article? It is not your job, I know, but it would help me on the future. I will then try to fix the rest of them. Kreivi Wolter 22:20, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **I would rather give you the main problems I see, which are apostrophe usage and verb conjugation.  CC7567  (talk) 01:06, December 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Still? Kreivi Wolter 18:49, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Yes. I'd recommend that you at least read it out loud to yourself and see if you can catch the remaining errors without me having to point them out.  CC7567  (talk) 22:06, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Fett
 * 7) * "Voyla believes that Artruk wouldn't notice them when his occupied by the treasures marched before him." Please read this sentence, and try to find out what's wrong with it. Improper English.
 * 8) **Better now? Kreivi Wolter 11:15, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * "He thinks that the Magistrate is yet another greedy outlander who's come to steal the treasures of Ryloth and wants to "teach him a lesson", but the other Twi'lek notes that Argente is bringing items to Lessu, not taking from it." Please identify these Twi'leks, as it is quite confusing to the reader. Also, in the future, please place your punctuation before quotation marks. Also note that I fixed a grammatical error that I caught while I was giving this article a copyedit. It's "whose" not "who's". "who is come" doesn't work here.
 * 10) **I though that Syndulla and TA-175 shouldn't be named in Plot summary, as this is their first appearance, and both are unnamed in the story. But noted nonetheless. Thanks for the help. Kreivi Wolter 11:15, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * "Suddenly he notice that the irregular outlander is flanked by two battle droids." Again, you should identify "he". Are you talking about Cham or someone else?
 * 12) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 11:15, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *More to come. Also, I will look at my objections in your other nom soon.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:19, December 15, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Vote to remove nomination (AC only)

 * 1) Unaddressed objection for three weeks.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 20:18, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  CC7567  (talk) 20:28, January 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) He gone. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:38, January 31, 2010 (UTC)