Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Imperial Sentinel


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Imperial Sentinel

 * Nominated by: Xicer9 Atgar.svg( Rawr) 02:40, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nom.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:15, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Jinzler 20:49, 15 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 22:03, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:28, 30 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:40, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Lord Hydronium 21:41, 1 May 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Jinzler
 * 2) * In Dark Empire II, an Imperial Sentinel is present when Sedriss returns returns to Byss after the Battle of Balmorra. You should mention this --Jinzler 13:39, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Missed that one, thanks. It's been mentioned. Xicer9 Atgar.svg( Rawr) 15:34, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 5) * Dark Side Adepts should be listed as an affiliation in the infobox.
 * 6) **Done.
 * 7) * The Emperor's Imperial Sentinels could probably use a mention, even if it's in the BTS.
 * 8) **Mentioned.
 * 9) * Context on Leia and Han in the intro/history.
 * 10) **Added.
 * 11) ***I don't see any. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 19:33, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) ****Should be there now.
 * 13) ***** I hate to say this, but while the context is there, I'm seeing an overuse of &mdash 's, specifically in the history. A few need to be replaced with commas, I think. Would you mind if I go through the article, doing so? Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:40, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) ******I've replaced many of them, but feel free to look through the article and change any others.
 * 15) *******Looks good. Sorry I'm such a pain. :p Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:15, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * I think it's pretty safe to say that the dissolution occurred when Byss was destroyed, given the fact that the Sentinels were created on Byss.
 * 17) **I originally wasn't going to put this in for fear of it being tagged as speculation, but it's been added now.
 * 18) * "Though apparently lacking Force-sensitivity, Sentinels were altered through the use of Sith Alchemy and shared a mental link with Adepts, suggesting that they were a form of Sithspawn." - does the relevant source suggest that they were a form of Sithspawn, or is that your own conclusion?
 * 19) **The DE Sourcebook gave a description of the Sentinels that pretty accurately matched the description given on the Sithspawn page. I removed the sentence though.
 * 20) * The article for The Creation of Monsters suggests the creation of the Sentinels was present in the book. Is this true?
 * 21) **I can't seem to find it in any of the sources so I'm willing to be it's just speculation.
 * 22) *Nice job. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 14:40, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **Thanks. :) Xicer9 Atgar.svg( Rawr) 15:34, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) If the sentinels aren't in Empire's End, how can you definitively source their total destruction to that source? Thefourdotelipsis 23:20, 27 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) *While they don't appear in the comic their cloning facilities were located on Byss and since they remained on Byss unless led off-world by a Dark Side Adept most if not all of them would have been on Byss when it blew up. I originally wasn't going to put this in the article but I mainly did so to address an earlier objection. Perhaps I should put a note in the Bts section concerning this issue. Xicer9 Atgar.svg( Combadge) 00:02, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) **What you can do is say without saying it. Just remind people of their facilities and themselves being mostly on Byss, then say it was destroyed. It's always possible, if not necessarily probable, they they somehow survived, so saying directly that they were destroyed is speculative; however, if you only say as much as the canon, you can let people draw whatever conclusions they would from the canon itself without speculating in the article. - Lord Hydronium 00:07, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) ***Thanks for the suggestion, I've reworded the those sections a bit to make it more ambiguous. I also removed the dissolution date since that would just confirm the total annihilation of the Sentinels. Xicer9 Atgar.svg( Combadge) 00:53, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) Chack Attack:
 * 29) * Context on Sovereign Protectors.
 * 30) **Added.
 * 31) * I'd like to see you mention what planet Boda was one when he was arrested. My first thought was that it was Coruscant, but obviously that can't be it since they took him there.
 * 32) **The Dark Empire Sourcebook doesn't specify on what planet the arrest took place. It simply says The first Sentinels appeared, typically, without any explanation, at the scene of a battle where a few Jedi had been captured. It then continues to give information on Boda's arrest and his subsequent execution. I've reworded the paragraph a little to make it a bit clearer.
 * 33) *Otherwise, very good job. Enjoyable read.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:03, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **Thanks for the review! Xicer9 Atgar.svg( Combadge) 01:38, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) "If the process was unsuccessful, the monstrosities were simply disposed of." Monstrosities seems a little POV. Green Tentacle (Talk) 20:01, 30 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) *Reworded. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 22:40, 30 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) For a more narrowed-down date of when the Sentinels were founded, the Essential Guide to the Force establishes that Ashka Boda was killed in 19 BBY. - Lord Hydronium 20:53, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) *You're right, I completely skipped over the timeline in the EGttF when I was researching him. The date's been changed. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 21:35, 1 May 2009 (UTC)

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