Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Baljos Arnjak


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Baljos Arnjak

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:40, 1 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: They're back!

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Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:41, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:22, 7 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Loo loo loo, you got some apples. Cull Tremayne 03:33, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 23:05, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 17:42, 9 November 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 2) * "Homeworld: probably Coruscant[1]" &mdash; ref note notwithstanding, I don't like this. I'd rather you removed it from the infobox and instead explained in the bio that he had a Coruscanti accent, etc etc.
 * 3) **Removed, accent bit moved to P&T&mdash;it's not pertinent to bio. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I would somewhat disagree but P&T works fine.
 * 5) * A bit about the purpose of the mission to Coruscant wouldn't go amiss.
 * 6) **Added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * Same with some context on the devourer tank
 * 8) **A bit more added, but it was already fairly contextified. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Please give an indication of how long Arnjak was on Coruscant.
 * 10) **It's already in there. Look at the beginning of the paragraph marked "While on Coruscant." Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Iirc, Hamner et al. only went through with the invasion because of Arnjak's information. If this is the case it should be included.
 * 12) **A check of TUF confirms that is not the case. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:30, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***CUSWE led me astray. ;) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:41, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ** -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:29, 4 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) Chack
 * 16) * "Skywalker discovered a devourer tank, a tank filled with a purifying organism, which was the source of the cleaner air, but believed something was underneath it". Could this be reworded? It sounds a bit unwieldy.
 * 17) * "However, the laboratory was deserted and still had functional power systems, so that became their new hideout; it was also isolated and defensible." Could you reword this as well? It just doesn't flow great.
 * 18) * "at least an accent that Luke Skywalker attributed to either Coruscant or those who aspired to living on that world." Huh? Can you try to fix the wording here? It's confusing.
 * 19) *Good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:26, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) *Reworded all of the above. Let me know if it needs more tweaking. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:40, 6 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) From the cockpit of Xwing328:
 * 22) * Context for Borleias and the siege.
 * 23) * Perhaps explain the orbital drop, since it was quite unique. —Xwing328 (Talk) 18:06, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **Added some context, brief explanation for orbital drop. It's not all that unique though&mdash;the Wraiths have used those pods on numerous occasions. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:49, 8 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) ***Huh, I thought that was the first time they had been used. Of course, it's been awhile since I read NJO. —Xwing328 (Talk) 23:05, 8 November 2008 (UTC)

Comment


 * Quite a short one. It won't take long to read. I promise. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:40, 1 November 2008 (UTC)