Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Thar'quan

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:31, November 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Gimme some air ← and this is the reason why I'm nominating this. Serious.

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:36, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Better the Defel you know than the one you don't. ~ SavageBob 22:18, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) LtNOWIS 20:02, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 18:23, January 10, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * I have noticed that in a number of previous noms and also some of your current ones, the intro has not been sufficiently long. Please make it bigger. Check your other noms for the same problem. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 07:55, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Try now. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:17, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * other scars due to his work with Rebel agent Sasnak Toxis while working for Hctaqsas Metals. Work/working a little repetitive. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:59, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **I love Thesaurus. Look now. Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:27, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 7) * "favoring the Rebel network on nearby Sriluur." Can you explain what you mean by "favoring"?
 * 8) **Oh, yep. Done now. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 21:43, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * I think a lot of the information in the second paragraph of "Biography" might better fit under "Personality and traits". A list of his scars and the fact that he showed them off seems more P&T'ish to me, for example. Nevertheless, the list of operations during which he received the injuries belongs instead under "Biography". In the end, you may have to repeat some information in both sections, but that's fine.
 * 10) * Does the book he first appeared in have a single author or a couple of authors? It might be good to note who created the character. Otherwise, looks solid! ~ SavageBob 01:17, December 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Done, done and, well, improved to the best of my skill.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 21:24, December 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) *** I'm still unsure what the "favoring" part means, though. ~ SavageBob 22:25, December 11, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Lyunesi

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 09:28, November 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A species hunted by Boba Fett. Thanks to Borsk and Cav for supplying some sources.

(0 ACs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object Comments
 * 1) Skippy having a look
 * 2) * Bio: Frail? You mean physically fragile, mentally fragile, easily broken, infirm...? Could you please give more info?
 * 3) * S&C: "Skill" used twice in a row. Please replace one.
 * 4) * In the galaxy: Any further information on Dinnid's death? The previous sentences suggest that the Shell Hutts were happy with Dinnid's services. Was he executed for some reason, or accidentally?...
 * 5) * Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:59, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1: It literally only says "the frail species". 2: Fixed. 3: I will see what I can do. --Eyrezer 10:49, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) *Why is there nothing about Boba Fett and his apparent hunts of the Lyunesi? Looks like it could be expanded upon.
 * 3) *Otherwise, an interesting article. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:17, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 5) *In addition to the above from Skippy and SoresuMakashi, can you clarify what you mean in the lead section about how their homeworld was "consumed in intense competition"? Does this mean consumed in the way we use it to mean we are "consuming" the earth by not recycling, etc.? Or do you mean "consumed" as in "dominated by," like "he was consumed with passion"? ~ SavageBob 06:08, December 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **I'm away for about a week, but will get onto these objections on my return. --Eyrezer 23:09, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Neimoidian controller (Saak'ak)

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 22:30, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Finally! I have wait a long time for this. Lets not screw it up.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) I'll vote! Just don't hurt me! Skippy Farlstendoiro 14:25, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:26, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice work. Watch out for contractions, though; they are not very encyclopedic. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 19:56, January 5, 2010 (UTC)

Object 12px"> QuiGonJinn (Talk) 20:27, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Please work on your grammar. This is a requirement per GAN Rule 1: an article must be well-written, and "well-written" includes good grammar. Incorrect grmmar furthermore makes it difficult to review articles, as it often makes the meaning of certain phrases confusing.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:55, November 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Ookay, I have now read the whole article. I fixed the errors I found, but if theres more of them, could you give me at least one example. I know it's not your job, but it would greatly help me in future. Kreivi Wolter 11:29, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Skippy'll have a look
 * 4) * Bio: Context for the "blockade of Naboo" and for "the crisis". You could also mention that Gunray was the Neimoidian in charge of the operation.
 * 5) **Fixed the crisis, but I wonder is it really necessary to tell about Gunray's role in this article? Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * He then managed to open the door. Consider Kenobi then managed to avoid ambiguity.
 * 7) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * Kenobi decided to find a way to cut the doors power off by destroying the generator, which caused the Neimoidian controller to deny it by screaming. What's "it"? What is he denying? The obvious fact that the generator has been destroyed?
 * 9) **XD when you put it in that way. Uhh, better now? Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * was later able to escape from the ship. Who did so?
 * 11) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * Please reword the following as I cannot really understand what you mean: Kenobi then questioned the controller about his work on the room, which the Neimoidian replied that he was monitoring the power generators of the hangar bay; also Kenobi cared for little
 * 13) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *I like this. Consider creating a sub-category of images for this guy's. Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:40, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) **Why the h*ll not? : ) Thanks for the review. Kreivi Wolter 12:27, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) The Grand Master
 * 17) * Is the "small room full of computers" the room from which he controlled the hangar bay power generators? If so, please clarify this.
 * 18) **Yes it is : ) Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * "which caused the Neimoidian controller to deny him to do so by screaming." Do you mean the Neimoidian tried to prevent him from doing so by screaming? Please clarify.
 * 20) **Removed "by screaming". Better now? Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***"By screaming" wasn't really the problem. What you mean by "To deny him to do so" is still unclear. This wording does not work here.
 * 22) ****Hmmm. I tried to describe this quote: "No! Don't touch the power generator". Damn, how do I have to say it? Kreivi Wolter 18:48, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) *****That's not "denying" him anything. "Deny" is the problem with the current wording.
 * 24) ******What word would suit better? Kreivi Wolter 20:09, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) *******Probably something like "prevent." Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:21, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) ********But "prevent" would indicate that he tried to stop the Jedi, but he only told him not to do it. Hmm, I have to say, I'm not sure how you say that in english... could the word "forbid" do the trick? Kreivi Wolter 12:23, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) *********Hmm, then perhaps "to yell at him not to touch the generator," or something like that?
 * 28) **********Hey, there it is! That fits perfectly. Thank you for you help, again. Kreivi Wolter 19:53, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) * "When the generator was destroyed, he only wanted to be left alone." Why did he want to be left alone?
 * 30) **I dont know. In the game, he only says "Please, leave me alone". Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) * Because the player can choose not to interact with the controller, you should add in the bts that it is unknown if any actual conversation between Kenobi and the controller took place in canon.
 * 32) ** I would rather not. Its already told by the Gamemechanics-template. Just like in the article Unidentified Naboo merchant, which is a good article. Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) ***In that game the player has to interact with the merchant. It is the player's choice whether to kill or realease him, but either way the player must interact with him. The player does not have to interact with this controller. For an example of what I mean, see such good articles as Kadir and Larrim.
 * 34) ****Um, the player dont actually have to interact with the merchant. In game, it is entire possible not to even meet him, and the player dont even have to. Kreivi Wolter 15:11, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) *****Well then that article has incorrect information, and I will bring this up at the next AC meeting. However, the fact remains that the player's conversation with the Neimoidian may or may not have canonically taken place, and thus even if it did take place, the form of the conversation is unknown (unless there are no options for what you say during the game), and this needs to be stated in your article.
 * 36) ******No need to do that; the merchant has been updated accordingly. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size:
 * 1) *******Well, what can I say to that? Better now? Kreivi Wolter 18:48, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I have gone through and fixed some some more of your grammar, but please continue to work on this in the future. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:35, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **I will. Thanks for the help. May the Force be with you : ) Kreivi Wolter 20:34, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Have you checked the game guide for a mention/any new information?  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:39, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) *Of what? Damn, I didn't even knew that that exist. Kreivi Wolter 05:57, December 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Just FYI, almost every Star Wars game (except the handheld, cellphone, flash and old Atari/NES/Arcade ones) has an accompanying strategy guide, so you must be sure to have them checked before nominating an article from a video game. This time, you could try contacting, who has the guide, but it's quite hard to catch up with him. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:27, December 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Ookay, I keep that in mind. I asked the said user about the mention. Now we can only wait :¨( Kreivi Wolter 18:48, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Doesn't the guide include a Voice cast-section? In that case, aren't all of the characters undoubtedly mentioned in the book? Kreivi Wolter 15:51, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *****All done. Finally I found someone who owns that book here on Finland. Kreivi Wolter 19:15, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Fett
 * 11) * "During the Federation's blockade of the planet Naboo he worked in a small computer room in the Saak'ak, where he was confronted and questioned by Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi..."' Obi-Wan was still a Padawan during the blockade of Naboo. He officially became a Knight after Yoda knighted him, which was after the blockade and the capture of Gunray.
 * 12) **And after the death of Darth Maul : ) . I realized it this morning. Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) * "However, Trade Federation Viceroy Nute Gunray, under the command of Sith Lord Darth Sidious, intended to kill the Jedi and begin the Invasion of Naboo." Quite confusing. Gunray did not intended to kill Obi-Wan and Qui-Gon, he wanted to after Sidious gave the Viceroy the order to do so. IIRC, you should say that the Jedi entered the Saak'ak as Republic ambassadors, but their coverup was foiled by that TC-14 droid.
 * 14) **Your objection just contains too much information which doesn't relate to this article. And what do you mean he didn't intend to kill them? I think he did. Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ***I realize that, however, you misunderstood me. Though, this objection appears to be corrected.
 * 16) * "The Jedi were able to escape Gunray's trap, but they were later separated." Separated? How were the Jedi separated? Also, just like the preceding objection, elaborate a little more on what Gunray tried to do on the Saak'ak. Without this information, the article is confusing.
 * 17) **Can't tell too much, as it doesn't relate to this article. However, fixed some of it. Better now? Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) ***It's relevant. However, it's fine now.
 * 19) * " Jedi Knight Obi-Wan Kenobi, who was trying to reach the hangar to escape from the Saak'ak, found his way to the room where the Neimoidian controller was working." I'm confused here. You say that the Jedi left Gunray's trap (which wasn't fully explained) but now they're still on the Saak'ak? Please clairfy. I would like to know how they separated, what this trap was and why suddenly did Obi-Wan find this room. Also, again, Obi-Wan is not a Jedi Knight at this point.
 * 20) **Again, much of that doesn't relate this article. Fixed the Jedi Knight thought. Kreivi Wolter 16:00, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***No; you misunderstood me again, Kreivi. Please clarify how Obi-Wan found the room where this Neimoidian was in. However, I see that Jonny corrected this.
 * 22) *I'll continue later on.  JangFett  (Talk) 12:47, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **Well, much of your obcjetions fixed by Jonjedigrandmaster. Kreivi Wolter 19:53, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) ***I thank Jonny for that then. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 21:28, December 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) One more: could you condense the information about Kenobi and Jinn in the second paragraph of the bio? There's just a bit too much extraneous info on them there.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 21:21, December 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) *Pffffff... first I'm told to expand the section, as it's too fuzzy without the info of the Jedi. And now it's too long. Sigh... but, I think it's not too long; just look the same section on article OOM-9. Sure, this section is little longer than the one in OOM-9, but like Jang said, the section is little too confusing without it. Kreivi Wolter 17:20, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) **Not only is this section longer than OOM-9's, OOM-9 is also a much larger article than this one, meaning that this section is much larger proportionately. There's just too much extraneous detail right now: "Shortly after the beginning of the blockade, Jedi Master Qui-Gon Jinn and his Padawan, Obi-Wan Kenobi, were sent by the Republic's Supreme Chancellor, Finis Valorum, to negotiate a solution between the Federation and Naboo. However, Trade Federation Viceroy Nute Gunray, under the command of Sith Lord Darth Sidious, was ordered to kill the Jedi and begin the Invasion of Naboo. The Jedi were able to escape Gunray's attempted assassination in the Saak'ak's conference room, but they were later separated after being attacked by destroyer droids." All this could easily be condensed. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:56, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Good now? Kreivi Wolter 21:04, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I have thought to made as many articles of this PM game as possible, but now that I know that there is an official guide (which I dont have), and theres really isn't many users that owns it (at least as far as i know), do I have to cancel this idea?. Kreivi Wolter 12:23, December 10, 2009 (UTC)

Battle of Primus Goluud

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:24, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yep.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nice. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:20, December 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Goodie : ) Kreivi Wolter 04:44, December 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:31, January 5, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Kreivi sputters
 * 2) * Casualties: No notable figures... eh, what?
 * 3) **Yeah... there's no info given on casualties in the source material.
 * 4) ***Then it shoud be "Casualties: Unknown".
 * 5) ****Fine. Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:58, December 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * Prelude is now bigger than the battle itself. I'm not familiar with the appearances/sources, so I ask: can the battle section be improved?
 * 7) **Not really. The battle itself is very, very short. The actual fighting between Teta's forces and the Sith is only in a couple panels of the comic.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:31, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *This was just my first, single look on the article. More to come, if necessary.Kreivi Wolter 13:24, December 1, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Gira

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:37, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The guy kills himself after Darth Vader betrays him, heh&hellip;

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Pre-nom reviewed. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 22:45, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:54, December 8, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) --Demos Traxen 02:08, December 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:43, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * managed to survive the Great Jedi Purge The Great Jedi Purge was an extended extermination of the Jedi. This event would have been part of it. It would be more correct to say he survived Order 66, or, as you have done in the intro, the initial stages.
 * 3) **Please take a look at it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:40, December 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) The Grand Master
 * 5) * "The Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Vader eventually found Gira and the Padawans aboard a starship which was assisting them." This is rather confusing. How was the starship assissting them? (Also clarify this in the bio)
 * 6) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 04:53, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Okay, but now it sounds like the ship is sentient. I'm assuming that the crew of the ship (or at least the commander) was who was really aiding them, no?
 * 8) ****Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:43, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * "&hellip;but was betrayed by Vader when the Sith ordered the ship's commander to&hellip;" The commander of what ship? (The betrayal isn't very clear here, so this is rather confusing)
 * 10) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 04:53, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * When dueling Vader, what do you mean Gira was "being drawn to the dark side of the Force?"
 * 12) **This was in the story, it explains that Gira was being slowly drawn to it during his duel with Vader.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:43, December 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) * "&hellip;realizing that his destiny was to fail at both his duty and himself&hellip;" What do you mean by "fail at himself?"
 * 14) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:56, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) * Could you make an article for this battle?
 * 16) **Don't see how, the battle hasn't been mentioned in any other in-universe source. The CSWE says this took place on a ship, so would I title it Battle aboard an unidentified ship (Great Jedi Purge)?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 04:53, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) ***That could work. It's definitely a main event in Gira's life; I think you should at least make a stub for it.
 * 18) ****Done.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:52, December 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * Could you make an article for the ship commander?
 * 20) **We don't know anything about this commander, or if the commander is a man, woman, or anything.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 04:53, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) ***We know that the commander commanded a ship that aided a group of Jedi during the Great Jedi Purge. We know that Vader attacked them, and that the commander betrayed the Jedi when he realized that the Jedi wouldn't be able to fend off the Imperials. We don't need to know the commander's species or gender for an article about him/her/it.
 * 22) ****OK, I'll create the article, but what exactly would I title it?--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:55, December 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) *****How about just Unidentified starship commander?
 * 24) ******Done.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:43, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:52, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) **Thanks for the review, Jon.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:59, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) ***No problem.
 * 28) * Just one more quick question; the events here are a little unclear. Does the first "he" refer to Gira? Do you mean the stormtrooper corpses? "After he defeated the stormtroopers there, the ship's commander told the Gira that Vader had just entered the ship and was seven hundred meters away from the Jedi's position. Gira noticed that the corpses on the ground were shot through their backs; when he asked the commander about this, Vader ambushed the Jedi." Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:13, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) **Please try it.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:25, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) ***Better, but the corpses part is still confusing. Didn't Gira just kill them? Why would he be confused about how they had been killed?
 * 31) ****Added "whom he had not killed".--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:33, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 32) *****Ok, but are they or aren't they stormtroopers? (You don't have to clarify this on the page&mdash;right now it implies that they were.) I just want to make sure. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 19:37, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) ******Ah, OK. Yes, they are stormtroopers, added.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:42, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) *******Hey Jon, they weren't stormtroopers, rather they were Imperial corpses. So I added this.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 15:36, December 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) ********Ok, cool. :P Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:38, December 30, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I know, it needs more images. If anyone has Star Wars Tales 12, feel free to upload an image of Gira dueling Vader and an image of Gira putting his saber to his chest.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:37, December 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * Here you go: Gira vs. Vader, Gira's death. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 02:06, December 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * Wow, thank you, Xicer!--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:32, December 2, 2009 (UTC)

First Battle of Korriban (Great Hyperspace War)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:36, December 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yes, more TOTJ.

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Second Battle of Korriban (Great Hyperspace War)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:12, December 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Ho-hum.

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:51, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:04, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Kreivi Wolter 16:29, January 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object Soresu
 * 1) * Seeing that surrender was their only option, Dakhan ordered suicide attacks on the Republic forces, Clearly, surrender was not their only option if they managed to suicide attack.
 * 2) **Not really. The Atlas, which is the source I went to get info on this stage of the battle, says "When it became clear that surrender was their only option, acting Dark Lord Shar Dakhan ordered his warriors into suicide attacks against the invading fleet."
 * 3) ***Well that makes no sense to me. If they did something else then surrender wasn't the only option. Sigh. Whatever the Atlas says. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:51, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * You missed a description of the aftermath quote, so the source has become the description instead, and there is no ref tag. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:16, December 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:26, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) The Grand Master
 * 7) * Why the speculation here? "but the Koros forces, with numbers on their side and fueled by Teta's rhetoric, seemed too much." Also, the meaning is unclear. "Seemed too much" for what?
 * 8) **There isn't speculation in the sentence, or at least not intentionally. Reworded.
 * 9) * "The Sith Empire had fallen." Awfully short and choppy, and I can't help but feel that it's somewhat redundant. Please combine it or remove.
 * 10) **Removed.
 * 11) * The Great Hyperspace War template says that the Gank Massacres is the following conflict, whereas the infobox currently lists the Great Droid Revolution. Which is correct?
 * 12) **Gank Massacre seems to be correct. Changed.
 * 13) *Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:02, December 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 06:00, January 1, 2010 (UTC)

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The Clone Wars: Covetous

 * Nominated by: Kreivi Wolter 18:01, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:It was harder than I expected.

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 * 1) Nice job, Kreivi. Grammar problems are fixed now, I couldn't find any anymore. --Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 12:30, December 30, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Minor but extensive grammar issues throughout the article. I seriously recommend finding a better way to fix this, as grammar is currently your main issue and the problem that the GAN shouldn't have to fix for nominators.  CC7567  (talk) 20:05, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Ohhhh damn. Every time I think "now theres no bad grammar", someone comes and says that one little phrase. And I know it isn't your guys job to fix them. Sigh. I just have to learn to write better... But, for now, I ask only one thing: could you give me at least one example for the grammar issues of this article? It is not your job, I know, but it would help me on the future. I will then try to fix the rest of them. Kreivi Wolter 22:20, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **I would rather give you the main problems I see, which are apostrophe usage and verb conjugation.  CC7567  (talk) 01:06, December 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Still? Kreivi Wolter 18:49, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Yes. I'd recommend that you at least read it out loud to yourself and see if you can catch the remaining errors without me having to point them out.  CC7567  (talk) 22:06, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Fett
 * 7) * "Voyla believes that Artruk wouldn't notice them when his occupied by the treasures marched before him." Please read this sentence, and try to find out what's wrong with it. Improper English.
 * 8) **Better now? Kreivi Wolter 11:15, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * "He thinks that the Magistrate is yet another greedy outlander who's come to steal the treasures of Ryloth and wants to "teach him a lesson", but the other Twi'lek notes that Argente is bringing items to Lessu, not taking from it." Please identify these Twi'leks, as it is quite confusing to the reader. Also, in the future, please place your punctuation before quotation marks. Also note that I fixed a grammatical error that I caught while I was giving this article a copyedit. It's "whose" not "who's". "who is come" doesn't work here.
 * 10) **I though that Syndulla and TA-175 shouldn't be named in Plot summary, as this is their first appearance, and both are unnamed in the story. But noted nonetheless. Thanks for the help. Kreivi Wolter 11:15, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) * "Suddenly he notice that the irregular outlander is flanked by two battle droids." Again, you should identify "he". Are you talking about Cham or someone else?
 * 12) **Roger roger. Kreivi Wolter 11:15, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *More to come. Also, I will look at my objections in your other nom soon.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:19, December 15, 2009 (UTC)

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Mudgub

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 19:05, December 12, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Quickie species nom. ~ SavageBob 19:05, December 12, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:26, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 22:42, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice work, but please watch your linking in the future.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:26, January 10, 2010 (UTC)

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 * As with the Titterbug princess, can we get a second image that shows some scale? --Eyrezer 07:14, December 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * It ain't pretty, but I did my best. ~ SavageBob 04:13, December 19, 2009 (UTC)

Khar Shian

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 04:23, December 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first ever moon nom. A milestone!

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:36, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Nayayen ... TALK  09:00, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Just one thing in the intro: "This maneuver, coupled with some other trickery by Sadow, resulted in..." sounds rather unencyclopedic, can you reword this?  Nayayen ... TALK  19:47, December 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:20, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

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Ronika

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:28, December 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yeppidy-doo.

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:25, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * which caused Ronika to red from orbit. Missing a word or two, no?
 * 3) **Whoops. Addressed.
 * 4) *That's it for me. I'm liking these new noms, they're much improved IMO. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:04, December 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:18, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *** :) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:25, December 22, 2009 (UTC)

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Shadow Runner

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:20, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Ees more Floyd, no?

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 * 1)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:32, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:11, December 26, 2009 (UTC)

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 * I'm willing to bet that the new FAN limit rule is a cabalistic and malevolent attempt to make prolific writers move to the GAN page, flooding us with too many noms for us to handle, and thus making them seem superior :P. It looks like you've already started doing it. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:30, December 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm not at liberty to discuss this matter. :P  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 04:07, December 23, 2009 (UTC)

Battle of Bothawui (First; Great Galactic War)

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 19:50, December 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Read the first, then go for the second!

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 * 1) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 04:41, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 05:42, December 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:35, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Just one: if the title is conjectural, then it should not be bolded in the intro. However, if the battle is actually named the "Battle of Bothawui", then it has an official name. I think that moving the page to give it a different name that identifies it as "Battle of Bothawui " would be more appropriate, and the conjecture tag could then be removed.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 02:28, December 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I'm all for that, but before I move it, how would you suggest I indicate the difference between the two in the parenthetical notation? Would this be Battle of Bothawui (First; Great Galactic War) and the other be at Battle of Bothawui (Second; Great Galactic War)? Any suggestions? Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 07:56, December 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Hmm, well, I can't think of anything else, so unless anyone else has any better ideas, that sounds fine to me. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:59, December 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Okay, both have been moved. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 22:14, December 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Soresu
 * 6) * the Sith Empire was widely successful in all of its campaigns, particularly in the Outer Rim Territories. All of its campaigns up to that point were in the Outer Rim. A little redundant.
 * 7) * Casualties section in the infobox for the Republic should be "unknown", otherwise it seems like they took no losses. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:04, December 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **Just a quick note: words like "unknown" and "unidentified" are usually avoided in IU articles, precedent is to just leave a section blank if it is unknown. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 14:46, December 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **The first is taken care of, and I concur with Jon on the second. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 20:11, December 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) ***I am aware that we avoid using those words, but I thought I saw a number of GAs with unknown in the casualties. Checking through a few battle articles, it appears I was wrong. My mistake. Although I do believe that in these infobox things, leaving it blank could imply that they took no casaulties. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:35, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

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 * If this only appear to date is only in one source, then shouldn't the First mentioned be changed as Mentioned only? Kreivi Wolter 23:03, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * It should be neither. What it is now is correct. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 00:39, December 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * So the source explicitly identifies this as Battle of Bothawui; First, GGW (as opposed to First Battle of Bothawui (GGW)?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:25, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * It refers to both the first and the second as the Battle of Bothawui. They're clearly two different conflicts, so they need two separate articles, but the articles have kept the same name with differing parenthetical notations in order to avoid conjectural titles for events that are canonically named. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 00:44, January 5, 2010 (UTC)

Zellos

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 09:43, December 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:46, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) -- Xd1358  Talk 09:14, January 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:13, January 11, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) * After the Imperial capture of the Seswenna sector, the Emperor turned his sights towards the Mid Rim. Is the capture of Seswenna so important that it should be mentioned in the article? -- Xd1358  Talk 09:52, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Yes, it's the final action in the Outer Rim before the move into the Mid Rim. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 22:04, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) * "Despite massive Imperial advantages, the planet's Republic defenders were able to inflict considerable damage to the Sith strike force." What advantages? More soldiers, weather, luck? -- Xd1358  Talk 08:36, January 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) **I don't think I really need to expand on this in the intro&mdash;the intent of the intro is to give the reader a short summary of the article. For details, you read into the biography. The essential information is in the intro already. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 09:12, January 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) "With Imperial warships from across the galaxy at his command, the Grand Moff once again invaded Bothan Space" This implies that Zellos also was present during the first invasion; if this isn't true, then it needs to be reworded accordingly. Good work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:39, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *Woops. It's been fixed. Thanks for the review! Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 22:21, January 10, 2010 (UTC)

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Jin-Lo Rayce

 * Nominated by: Jedi Kasra (comlink) 05:33, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Has been mentioned only in passing, but established a Force-using organization during the Dark Times, hmmm&hellip;

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:57, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Dangerdan97 19:21, December 31, 2009 (UTC)

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 * Guest nom for WP:TFU.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:19, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

Zeta Five

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 05:51, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My final nom from Golden Age of the Sith/Fall of the Sith Empire. I never thought this day would come... *sniff*

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:06, December 31, 2009 (UTC)

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Siene Symm

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:50, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Go, Nien Nunb-lookalike from 1988!

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 * 1) --Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 15:51, December 31, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) The intro needs an expansion. I'm sure there's info to add to it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:01, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:14, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) "Also during this mission, Symm and the others in the Long Shot discovered that General Reekeene had been captured by Imperial forces and sent to the planet Flankers, whose sun would go nova in only hours. Symm piloted the Long Shot and fought the Imperials' defenses." Where did he fight the Imperials? I assume it's Flankers, but that info should be added in so this sentence doesn't stand out so much.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:07, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Have a look.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:16, January 11, 2010 (UTC)

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Eodon

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 18:24, December 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The only species who hate going to the dentist more than you do. ~ SavageBob 18:24, December 29, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) I've never watched an episode of Ewoks before... SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 21:35, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Missing an infobox ref
 * 3) * There seems to be a slight contradiction between the intro and history. The intro makes it seem as if the Ewoks won the tusks and gave them back, while the body makes it seem as the Eodon came in before the ewoks obtained the tusk, and took it back for himself.
 * 4) * Maybe mention their similarity to elephants and the parallels with the demand for their tusks? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:27, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks for your comments. I've tried to address your first two objections. As for the third, it seems that that's the intent of the writers and animators, but without a source actually saying so, I'm worried it will be original research. Any thoughts? ~ SavageBob 01:26, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Well, you should probably consult an AC, but IMO, there really is no doubt that Eodons are based on elephants. If I were writing it, I'd mention their similarity, but avoid flat-out stating that it was the artist's intentions. In my spelunker probe droid GA for instance, in the BTS, I mention that spelunker is a real word, but don't actually make any real connection. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:10, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ****If I may, I agree with Bob. Mentioning the stupidly-obvious similarity to real-life elephants is just pointless. If an author had stated that they purposely used elephants as the inspiration, then that would be fair game, but otherwise, it's just unnecessary. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:14, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *****Point taken. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 21:35, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Can you get a pic of the Eodon that shows its body? --Eyrezer 06:25, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Unfortunately, the image in the article is the only one available. It appears on screen for about two seconds, I think! ~ SavageBob 16:51, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

Modon Kira

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 06:31, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A badass.

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 * 1) Blacklist:
 * 2) *Missing sources.
 * 3) **I'm not sure which ones are missing... help me out here?
 * 4) ***I'm not going to give you the answers. It's not what the teacher teaches, but what the student learns. ;)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) *****Are you completely sure? Aside from checking all available sources, you might also want to check with someone like to see if Modon has any mention in any fact files.
 * 7) * Missing info from the audio drama.
 * 8) **Modon Kira neither appears or is mentioned in the audio drama.
 * 9) *** And that's exactly why you need to state the info from the audio drama.
 * 10) *** P.S.--Modon Kira is not replaced in the audio drama by Gobee.
 * 11) ****Well that's what it seemed like to me. Addressed.
 * 12) ***** What it seemed like to you is wrong, and is also unacceptable when it is not factual. Try again.
 * 13) ******When I posted that last comment I actually already had removed the part about Gobee; I was just saying that's what it seemed like to me.
 * 14) ******* I hear you, but it is still not complete. I assume you don't have the audio, so I'll go ahead and fix this for you at this point. Keep in mind, however, that by browsing some of the corresponding TOTJ articles, you would have found the correct information.
 * 15) * This can can use a thorough copyedit.
 * 16) **Addressed.
 * 17) * The intro reads a little unwieldy. You may want to rework some of it, preferably the pipelinking. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 07:05, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **What do you mean by pipelinking?
 * 19) ***I've taken care of it. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 05:50, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * "They relented when Galia confessed that she had willingly joined herself to Modon's son, and the Jedi instead went to lead a peace mission that would ask Amanoa to end the war." This reads like it's from Galia's article. Please rewrite it so that it's from Modon's POV.
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * "Little did Iziz know however, Galia willingly left with the Beast Riders so she could consecrate her love for Oron Kira." This sentence is unnecessary, because it has nothing to do with Modon Kira. Furthermore, this same point is made further down in the next paragraph.
 * 23) **Addressed.
 * 24) *You need to verify and state (in a "Legacy" section) whether or not this individual was named after Modon Kira.
 * 25) *That's all. I've done some cleaning up but it's otherwise good. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 05:50, January 5, 2010 (UTC)

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 * You crank these TOTJ noms out far too quickly without making sure all the bases are covered. Don't sacrifice quality for quantity. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 07:05, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Sorry. This is my first article from this period of TOTJ, and its must less straightforward than the noms from Golden Age of the Sith or Fall of the Sith Empire. Some problems are to be expected, I guess.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 05:55, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Hey Floyd, no hard feelings whatsoever. I'm glad that you are working on the TOTJ articles and thoroughly appreciative. I'm just hard on you because you are an Inquisitor as well as an experienced article writer, and such mishaps should be beyond you at this point. WP:TOTJ is and has been known for the quality of it's articles, and as the project lead, I want to maintain that reputation. Others have been just as hard on me for the same reasons, and it forced me to get better. We all make mistakes from time to time so it's not the end of the world. You do a great job here; keep up the good work. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 01:36, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Wishing everyone a happy new year! :D SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 13:07, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks. :)  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:37, January 1, 2010 (UTC)

Gizor Dellso

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:37, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Meesa back! And boy, video game characters are more complicated than they appear. :P

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 * 1) I fixed some tense issues with it, otherwise good.  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  14:17, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) I never got that far in the game but I understand who he is.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 19:48, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice. I planned this guy. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:34, January 5, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) Xd
 * 2) * Context on the 501st in the intro.
 * 3) * Context on Mustafar in the intro and the body.
 * 4) *-- Xd1358  Talk 15:06, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **The requirement for both of these is debatable. We can normally assume that the reader is familiar, at the very least, with the films and their canon elements.  CC7567  (talk) 20:06, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Well, I was wanting something like "The Elite Imperial 501st..." or just Imperial. -- Xd1358  Talk 20:08, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Then if it's something that minor, you're welcome to add it yourself. The nominator doesn't have to approve every single change that is made to his/her nomination.  CC7567  (talk) 20:10, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 9) *I'm pretty sure that you can't source the first sentence of the bio just to the ROTS VD.
 * 10) *Do we know that the Providence-class carrier/destroyer was Dellso's flagship? Also, you mention in one sentence that it was destroyed, but in the next, you say it was merely crippled.
 * 11) *That's all. Nice job. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:28, January 8, 2010 (UTC)

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Drokko Kira

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 05:57, January 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: In Okinawa, all Miyagi know two things: fish and karate.

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Capture of Eeth Koth

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 03:05, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Filoni always sounds drunk in his commentaries.

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 * 1) -- Xd1358  Talk 07:20, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Looks very good. &mdash;Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid!  12:47, January 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Jep. -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:37, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:58, January 10, 2010 (UTC)

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 * Spoiler-ish I suppose. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 03:09, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

Matchstick

 * Nominated by:-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 16:41, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A cleaned-up clone

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 * 1) Grammar issues still remain, to say the very least. I also hoped you've checked all sources for information.  CC7567  (talk) 17:21, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Well I don't know what all of the sources are. I did recheck my sources.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 17:57, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **If you don't know what sources there might be, you can ask someone who is more familiar with TCW sources. You're missing at least the Star Wars: The Clone Wars: The Official Episode Guide: Season 1, and you'd do well to check it for info.  CC7567  (talk) 18:31, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Okay I took a look and what I saw really didn't help but than again it wasn't a full, hard copy. I added it as a source.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 19:57, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****For sources, be sure to double check the episode guide and its commentary, the TCW TCG cards, both visual guides, and possibly you can take a look within the The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia. I also do believe that Matchstick appeared briefly within the Wii game Star Wars: The Clone Wars: Lightsaber Duels, which I also have and can catch for you.  JangFett  (Talk) 20:34, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *****Okay well I don't have any of those books or that game so that could be a problem JangFett. I'll work with what I have. Oh yeah, what is the TCW TCG? I haven't seen anything pertaining to that.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 20:42, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ******The Clone Wars Campaign Guide. I still recommend that you either get your hands on an actual copy of The Official Episode Guide or contact someone that does because that's the only way to confirm that there isn't any info missing.  CC7567  (talk) 22:01, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *******In the Star Wars PocketModel TCG article, you'll see two links that say "Clone Wars" and "Clone Wars Tactics". Both are TCW-related, and should have something about Matchstick. To see each individual card, you can refer to this website: . And yes, I'll check Lightsaber Duels for you.  JangFett  (Talk) 12:21, January 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ********Okay, I checked and the closest I could find was Matchsticks Y-wing which was of no help. Thank you for your help. I greatly appreciate it! Oh and CC, I checked a shelf copy of that book and I don't think I am missing anything.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 03:00, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Attack of the Clone
 * 11) * Please continue to check your grammar. This should be the issue of least concern in all nominations.
 * 12) * I would recommend to read all other clone FA and GAs to see if you're missing anything.
 * 13) * "due to the breaking of procedure": what "breaking of procedure"?
 * 14) **This still remains. I'm striking all other objections and will review them later once other reviewers are finished.  CC7567  (talk) 22:00, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) * How is Grievous at all related to the Malevolence?
 * 16) * Please make sure that every single detail in the article is directly relevant to Matchstick and shorten or remove whatever is not.
 * 17) **You told me in my last GANom that I had to have backround info.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:19, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***That does not mean simply summarizing the comic. If you need help on this one, I recommend reading any of the current character GAs.  CC7567  (talk) 22:24, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****I looked at a very similar article (one that you worked too) and it follows what I did.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 23:58, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * The Neebray did not "inhabit" the nebula.
 * 21) * "During this, Matchstick's fighter was damaged but he downplayed the damage across Koon, as the mantas did not cause any casualties apart from an astromech droid." Please check your grammar and somehow rephrase this to correctly use English idoms.
 * 22) * Check your linking for both overlinking and lack thereof.
 * 23) * I'm almost certain that you can use more quotes in this article.
 * 24) *More to come.  CC7567  (talk) 03:12, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **I can not find "due to breaking of procedure" in this article. I advise that you look at the article name first. What are the Neebray doing there if they are not inhabiting the nebula? Grievous was the commander of the Malevolence at that time.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 03:33, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) ***Please look more closely (and look exactly what you should be searching for) instead of assuming that I'm reading the wrong article. Also, if I'm asking a question in an objection, that means that it's unclear in the article, not that it's a factual question. You should therefore be clarifying it in the article instead of replying to me with the answer here. For the Neebray issue, you can find the answer by rewatching the episode; it's stated quite clearly there.  CC7567  (talk) 03:52, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) ****There. I believe I have fixed your problems. Also, in my last GANom attempt, you said that I needed to provide backround information and to write the article for a reader who only knew the 6 movies and their canon. I am simply following your teaching.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 21:44, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) Fett
 * 29) *In the infobox, "Rise of the Empire era" should not be sourced to the clone troopers databank entry, but rather the TCW novel instead. I corrected this, but please be aware of this.
 * 30) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) *As for the rest of the infobox sourcing, you need to go back and make sure everything is properly sourced. I am seeing certain information in the infobox that should not be sourced to the clone troopers db entry. The only correct sourcing I see so far is the era, homeworld, and and death listings.
 * 32) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) *"During the Balmorra Run, Matchstick's bomber was damaged by a Neebray manta" During the Balmorra Run? That isn't factually correct. The Balmorra Run was a hyperspace lane (TCW created canon), and not a type of "run" (i.e Kessel Run). You may say the group took the hyperspace lane as a shortcut to out run the Malevolence, but in your own words of course. Also, the Balmorra Run also goes into the Kaliida Nebula.
 * 34) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) *There is a huge time gap between "During the Balmorra Run.." and the previous sentence. You fail to mention about Skywalker's plan (the meeting onboard the Resolute) or any relevant information regarding it. Right now, it sounds like the group took the new Y-Wing bombers and set off to join something called the "Balmorra Run". Please correct this.
 * 36) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 37) *"After coming out of the Kaliida Nebula, Shadow Squadron engaged the Malevolence and their Vulture droids." Whose Vulture droids? By saying "their" is the Malevolence a group or a warship? Quite confusing for the reader.
 * 38) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 39) *"When the massive warship fired its ion cannon on the squadron, Matchstick's bomber's engines failed and he collided with fellow pilot Tag's Y-wing, killing both pilots and their gunners." So his starfighter was "destroyed" because of the ion ray? No, the ion ray cannot destroy an enemy starfighter, but disable it. You fail to mention about Skywalker's order to fly over the edge of the ray. And while Matchstick was doing so, his engines failed, due to the damage and stress it was enduring. The damage was caused by that Neebray.
 * 40) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) *In the intro, context on Grievous.
 * 42) **Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) *That's it for now. Please go back and correct these intro issues. Also, here's a tip to addressing objections: please make comments below each objection. It's quite easier for the objector to make comments and see what's done and not.  JangFett  (Talk) 01:59, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) **"After taking the bombers to Skywalker's flagship, the Venator-class Star Destroyer Resolute, Matchstick and Shadow Squadron were briefed by Skywalker and Admiral Wulff Yularen, the commander of the Resolute. Skywalker explained the plan of destroying the bridge tower of the Malevolence with the bombers in order to kill Confederate General Grievous, the commander of the Malevolence. Shortly thereafter, Yularen reported that Grievous had attacked a Republic medical convoy at Ryndellia. Since Ryndellia was near the Mid Rim planet of Naboo, and that Grievous had previously attacked a medical convoy, Skywalker concluded that Grievous' next attack was the Kaliida Shoals Medical Center. This facility contained over 60,000 injured clone troopers. Departing from the Resolute Master Plo Koon and Shadow Squadron followed Skywalker along the nearby Balmorra Run. This shortcut promised arrival at the medcenter before the Malevolence."
 * 45) **"As the ion cannon's ray approached the Republic squadron, Skywalker immediately ordered his fighters to head for the top edge of the ray, to avoid being neutralized. Despite the attempts of Shadow Squadron to evade, the ray deactivated three Y-wing bombers, as well as most of the Vulture droids. During the Squadron's evasive manuever, Matchstick's engines failed, causing his fighter to collide with fellow pilot Tag. The ships exploded killing both pilots and their gunners."
 * 46) ** Please take a detailed look at this article and its infobox please.-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 21:15, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) ***RC 1138, I can only say that you must refer to other clone trooper GAs to get a sense of what sources should be listed in the infobox. His hair, eye, species and gender should be sourced to the episode, not the db entry. His height is the only suitable clone trooper db source. And as for the bio, if you say that he is the clone of Jango Fett, then that should be sourced to the db entry as well. Also, again, please make comments directly below each objection.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:41, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ****Complied-- RC 1138 Republic Emblem.svg hate bugs! 22:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)

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 * Added GAnom. ;)  Nayayen &mdash; TALK  16:42, January 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Added link to his entry in the CUSWE.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:22, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

Cliff wampa

 * Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:40, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's ALIVE!

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 * 1) Nice job. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 21:36, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Great work, Tope.  JangFett  (Talk) 01:31, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) With those two dead stormtroopers lying on the ground near him, you'd think it was a bad depicition of Chewie. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:21, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) I still think at least semi-sentients should count for WP:A --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:00, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) I used to love this. Makes me wish I still had a working N64 :P.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 10:02, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Although I really hate the image :P -- Xd1358  Talk 13:09, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Great work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 14:25, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) I saw this guy when I played SotE a few days ago.  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 14:42, January 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy. It's a species, or something, right?
 * 2) * Behavior: Cliff wampas were hungry? Hungry as in naturally, always hungry? Did they have a problem digesting or something? Did they eat much less than their bodies needed? Please expand.
 * 3) **That's precisely what the source info says, and it does not elaborate. Expansion would be impossible.
 * 4) * Behavior: On a related note, you'd probably want to specify their eating behaviors (Carnivore?).
 * 5) **There is no specific information regarding this for the cliff wampa. Saying they were carnivores would be extrapolation.
 * 6) * History: The Empire was so impressed with the powerful wampa after receiving reports of how the creatures terrorized Echo Base Can you reword this sentence chronologically, to keep with the encyclopedic style? First the Empire received reports, then the Empire became impressed.
 * 7) **I don't feel a change is warranted here. The sentence is grammatically correct, reads perfectly clear, and doesn't violate any kind of encyclopedic chronological writing style. This is just a wording variation to keep the text flowing and compelling to read. If I may, I believe your non-native English language barrier may be causing your confusion.
 * 8) * BtS: Why is Ryan Kaufman listed as "Cliff Wampa Zoologist"? Did he played any important part in the design and/or programming of the creature?
 * 9) **That's probably a safe inference, but there is no further information regarding this.
 * 10) * BtS: If an official source refers IU to the cliff wampa as "mountain wampa", both the introduction and the body should say "The cliff wampa, also known as mountain wampa". If the reference is OOU, please specify in BtS.
 * 11) **It's not exactly an official source, per se. This game guide is written in a very informal, colloquial manner, and I would not consider "mountain wampa" to be a canonically-viable reference at all. I have tweaked the sentence to clarify its informal nature.
 * 12) * Cliff wampa is unrelated to Cliff Clavin, Rebel Major :P Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:28, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks for reviewing. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:51, January 7, 2010 (UTC)

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Suu

 * Nominated by: Jawaman 19:19, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first GAN ever! If you spot any problems, just write it under "object" or on my talk page, so I can fix it.

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 * 1) Pre-nom reviewed. -- Xd1358  Talk 13:06, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Turd... hee hee. Kreivi Wolter 18:44, January 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Fett's preliminaries
 * 2) * Please replace the current infobox image, and find a more suitable one. The SW.com promotional cropped image of Suu simply does not work here.
 * 3) **If you can find one, go ahead. I'm no good with images. &mdash;Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:11, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Don't mind, already asked JMAS. &mdash;Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:41, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Jang's a great guy, but I think this objections is rediculous. But, to make him happy, there ya go. -  JMAS  Jolly Trooper.png Hey, it's me! 20:23, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *****You have to admit, the current infobox image is better than the old promotional one. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 20:55, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ******I admit nothing! :p -  JMAS  Jolly Trooper.png Hey, it's me! 20:57, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *******Looks way better now. &mdash;Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:07, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) *You have too many subsections within her bio.
 * 10) **What did I say, Jawaman =P -- Xd1358  Talk 13:07, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Is it solved now? &mdash;Jawaman No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:24, January 7, 2010
 * 12) ****Actually, he ment headers, not paragraphs. -- Xd1358  Talk 16:46, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) *****Fixed, finally. :) &mdash;Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 19:15, January 7, 2010
 * 14) *Double check your sources. Make sure you check the episode guide, as not everything in the article can be sourced to the episode.
 * 15) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 16) *The episode is not a source for "Rise of the Empire era". A more proper source would be the TCW novel.
 * 17) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 18) *You have too many images, and that image of Suu and her family should be removed. As you remove unneeded subsections, make sure your paragraph sizes are proportional.
 * 19) **I don't see why the family picture should be removed. I'd think a good picture of Suu's family would be quite essential to her article. Much more than one that only shows her in the background holding her kids. Gry Sarth 11:12, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 21) *More to come  JangFett  (Talk) 19:57, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) Fett, part I
 * 23) *"During a battle on Saleucami, four Republic troops found Cut and Suu's farmhouse, after their officer, clone trooper captain CC-7567, nicknamed "Rex", was shot by a Confederate commando droid." I do not understand how they found the farmhouse. So after Rex was shot, they found the farm house? Also, please check your grammar here.
 * 24) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 25) *I do believe that the first paragraph of "Early life" can be condensed a little. It currently mentions the origins of Cut, rather than Suu's.
 * 26) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 27) *"He and Suu eventually married, and Cut became the adoptive father of her two children, the four-year-old boy Jekk and the five-year-old girl Shaeeah." IIRC, those were his children, and not adoptive. In the episode guide, it mentions the word "adopted," however, I do think it was referring to his children, as the word has different meanings. And as for "He and Suu eventually married," this should be centered around Suu's poi, and not Cut's.
 * 28) **Fixed. Read the EG again. The kids are 4 and 5 year old, so they can't be Cut's children, since he hadn't even met Suu then. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 17:00, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) *"His Recusant-class light destroyer was heavily damaged during the battle, and the general was forced to leave the ship in an escape pod." Where was this happening? IIRC, his destroyer was damaged following the Capture of Eeth Koth, and not the Saleucami battle. Also, please reread this sentence and try to find out what's wrong. Where was this ship when it happened? Is it relevant in Suu's article?
 * 30) **Fixed. "Is it relevant in Suu's article?", yes, it is. How else should I explain why the clone troopers were on Saleucami? By the way, Grievous's ship was damaged during the Capture of Eeth Koth and the First Battle of Saleucami. Rewatch the episode if you don't believe me. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 17:28, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) *There is too much irrelevant information regarding that battle on Saleucami. Go back and remove and condense certain parts.
 * 32) **I see no problem here. It are 2 lines. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 18:51, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) *"The remaining clones destroyed both commandos and brought their wounded comrade to Suu's farm." Was it Suu's or Cut's farm? Please be consistent. Also, this sentence isn't factually correct. It sounds like the clones' knew about the homestead, although they didn't.
 * 34) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 35) *"Suu, while pointing a blaster rifle at them, asked the troopers what they wanted. Jesse explained that they are not looking for trouble, they just needed a place to tend their injured captain. Suu agreed to help and she lets them stay in the farm" Too play by play. You can condense these choppy sentences to make it flow better.
 * 36) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 37) *I'm seeing many grammatical errors and tense issues. I saw a few instances of "is". Present tense should never be in IU articles. Everything in IU articles must be in past tense.
 * 38) **Don't know what you're talking about. I found none "is's". &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 17:30, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 39) *"Later, she brought some food to the troopers, and Suu told them that her husband was away for the moment, so he could deliver the first harvest of the season. Rex, still knowing he had a mission to complete, placed Jesse in command and ordered his men to continue the search for Grievous without him." Check your grammar here. Also, please reread these sentences. I don't understand Rex's "mission" and what you meant by "so he could deliver the first harvest of the season.".
 * 40) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 41) *"At night, Rex heard an eopie entering the barn." I'm going to simply tell you to go back and correct these "At night" "Later," transitions. Not only they disrupt the flow of the sentences, it's quite confusing. What is this "at night"? Was it after Suu giving the clones' food?
 * 42) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 43) *"The farmer Cut sneaked into Rex's room armed with a spear." Rex's room? Also, again, watch your grammar. IIRC, Cut wasn't armed in the beginning. He grabbed his weapon as he entered the room. Also in the next sentence, you mention a "staff". Was it a spear or staff? Be consistent.
 * 44) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 45) *The paragraph that beings with "At night," severely needs condensing. It's too play by play, and reads like viewer-poi. (i.e, to go play hide-and-seek). I recommend that you read other character articles to get a sense of what should be included in articles, and what things should not be included.
 * 46) *That's it for now. Currently, the article needs much work. However, I wouldn't recommend dropping the nomination, Jawaman. After these issues are fixed, I'll continue on with my review. I recommend that you check your grammar, tense issues, and general redundant play by play information. Articles shouldn't read as a novel, as it's un-encyclopedic.  JangFett  (Talk) 20:48, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) **Working on it. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 15:51, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) *I'm finished, Jang. So you can strike objections, if you agree that they are fixed. Then you will probably make a completely new list, I assume. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:44, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) One more. Please remove the image of her homestead; you can perhaps get the family image back by doing that.  Xd1358  Talk 11:16, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 50) *Fixed. Jawaman
 * 51) **You still have too many images; I'd suggest you remove that "Suu after they discovered the droids". Xd1358  Talk 16:24, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) ***I do not agree with you, but oke, it's fixed now. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 17:14, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 53) The Grand Master's first look
 * 54) *There are some tense issues at the end of the bio.
 * 55) *Also, parts of the bio are too play-by-play.
 * 56) *Where in the episode does it indicate that Suu was capable of defending the farm when Cut was away? It definitely shows that she was brave, but this should be attributed to other events in the episode (such as when she confronted the clones).
 * 57) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 58) ***This doesn't fix the issue, now you say that she used her blaster to scare off the clones; where you have it placed now has nothing to do with her bravery. Also, where in the episode does it say that "she could use a blaster rifle to scare off any intruders?"
 * 59) *The personality and traits section needs to be expanded.
 * 60) * Remember, characters should be mentioned by their last name as opposed to their first name after their first mention in the intro and body; (i.e. "Lawquane" instead of "Cut")
 * 61) **Fixed. Jawaman
 * 62) *More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:09, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 63) **I'm working on it. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 18:47, January 10, 2010 (UTC)

Comments I ment Jawaman :) It's either WP:OR or WP:TRIVIA -- Xd1358  Talk 16:30, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Actually, if a reviewer catches any issues within the article, he or she will list objections under "Object". Please familiarize yourself with the GAN rules above.  JangFett  (Talk) 19:44, January 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Not really an objection, just curious: in our Finnish language, "suu" means "mouth". Should this be mentioned in the article BtS dection? Kreivi Wolter 14:18, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * It doesn't really add anything to the article, does it? &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:03, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * It's trivia. And don't strike other users objections, they'll do it themselves when they feel their objection has been satisfied. -- Xd1358  Talk 16:12, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * I assume you didn't ment me by that "don't strike others objections" part, as I haven't striked any : ) But there are articles like Kalevala and Cato Parasitti, which contains this kind of section in BtS. Kreivi Wolter 16:24, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * But "Suu" meaning "mouth" is probably just a coincedent. &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 16:28, January 7, 2010
 * Well, so be it. Kreivi Wolter 17:03, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * I have a crazy example by the way, Kreivi. You know Drol, that "CIS superweapon", it means "turd" in Dutch. Although, it was later added to the trivia section of that article because the Dutch spoken version of that episode replaced the word "drol" with "grol". &mdash;<Font color="SaddleBrown">Jawaman <Font color="SaddleBrown">No, I did NOT steal your droid! 17:31, January 7, 2010

The Clone Wars: The Valley

 * Nominated by:  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 02:41, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Wow, this one was empty.

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Object
 * 1) Before I even begin, you are missing sourcing in the infobox and BtS. The intro needs expanding. Please refer to TCW comic GAs to get a sense of what needs to be added in TCW comic OOU articles, i.e The Clone Wars: Procedure, The Clone Wars: The Fall of Falleen, The Clone Wars: Cold Snap, The Clone Wars: Transfer, and The Clone Wars: The Dreams of General Grievous.  JangFett  (Talk) 02:46, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Roger roger!  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 14:33, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Xd
 * 4) * Serious underlinking in plot. -- Xd1358  Talk 17:42, January 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Roger roger!  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 03:08, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Captain Typho goes to investigate, and finds three B1 battle droids.. You forgot the tactical droid.
 * 7) * and the unreliability of the sensors in the valleys may have fooled the sensors what?
 * 8) * spots two B1 battle droids on STAPs and a B1 on a Flitknot speederbike. You forgot the tactical droid here as well.
 * 9) **This one still remains.
 * 10) ***Changed to spots two B1 battle droids on STAPs and a B1 on a Flitknot speederbike, along with a tactical droid.
 * 11) * Captain Typho contacts Queen Neeyutnee and Sio Bibble via hologram. Who is Bibble?
 * 12) *The Valley explains why Senator Amidala was on Naboo during the events of Blue Shadow Virus. What Blue Shadow virus?
 * 13) **Added clarity.
 * 14) * Xd1358 Talk 07:15, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Roger roger!  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 14:38, January 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * Plot: Who is Bow and Chrin.
 * 17) **Added clarity.
 * 18) * Intro: Underlinking, check again. Xd1358  Talk 11:14, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **I think I got it.  Darth Karika Please leave a message after the beep. *boom* 16:27, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * That sentence Suddenly, a security officer spots two B1 battle droids on STAPs and a B1 on a Flitknot speederbike, along with a tactical droid. is still pretty unclear. According to this image, there was no B1 on the speeder bike.
 * 21) **Fixed.
 * 22) ***"Chrin shoots the speederbike with a missile launcher; it and its pilot are immediately destroyed." The following sentence still implies there were two passengers on the speederbike.
 * 23) ****Fixed.
 * 24) * The droids are destroyed, and Senator Padmé Amidala is called back to Naboo to help. So, the droids are destroyed and she is called back. Nothing else? Xd1358  Talk 16:33, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **Unfortunately, nothing else. The comic ends there.

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Gerran

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:51, January 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A minor character mentioned in Dynasty of Evil

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