Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of the Ambria system


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Battle of the Ambria system

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:26, January 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: In which Wookieepedians desperately race to keep the CAN page occupied.

(3 ECs/1 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Looks good. Nice work. Everyone keep the CANs coming! :P &mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 02:17, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2) graestan ( talk ) 22:13, January 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:27, February 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  19:22, February 5, 2012 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I believe that there is too much described in this article. It needs merely mention the name and object of the campaign. As it stands, it reads as though you've arbitrarily chosen which other battles to mention. Furthermore, one cannot tell from the article just how the campaign proceeded in the first place, as two prongs are mentioned, then one's movements are described, without placing the Battle of the Ambria System somewhere definitive in a timeline. Perhaps simply exlaining that this battle was part of one prong of said campaign and mentioning whether or not the campaign was successful would suffice.  graestan ( talk )
 * 2) *Is this any better? I don't think we should mention the end of the campaign in this article since it's far enough away from the end that that's not necessarily relevant to it. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:06, January 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) **Much clearer, thanks. graestan ( talk ) 22:13, January 31, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) The name of this article should probably be something like "Battle of Ambria (Mandalorian Wars)." Although we do not have definitive proof the battle occurred on the planet, even battles fought near the planet in question are named after the planet even in-universe such as the Battle of Derra IV.  graestan ( talk ) 06:00, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * 5) *Which planet in the system was it fought near? I think the status quo is fine for these. It's the smallest confirmed area that the battle took place in. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:41, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * 6) **Fair enough, however I would certainly like to see it at least titled "Battle of the Ambria system" per the most oft-used form in publications. graestan ( talk ) 22:48, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
 * 7) ***I'll be working on moving the others to the proper places over the next little while. For now, Ambria's done. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:08, January 31, 2012 (UTC)

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