Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Ranulph Tarkin


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Ranulph Tarkin

 * Nominated by: Havac 07:34, 10 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I think we decided he was an uncle or something. Havac 07:34, 10 May 2009 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/0 Users/4 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:02, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 09:29, 23 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:12, 23 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Worked out via IRC. —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 02:48, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 11:47, 12 June 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * You use "Tarkin" too many times in the last paragraph of the intro.
 * 3) **Reduced some. There are a lot of people in that paragraph, though, so any more pronouns than that would get unclear, I think. Havac 04:53, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * "The senator believed that would not only end the threat of the Stark Combine..." "That" what? I think a word is missing there.
 * 5) **I think he believed "that" -- the attack outlined in the previous sentence -- would end the threat, blah blah. You're right that it's unclear, and I've made it clearer. Havac 04:53, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Not much of an attack. :P Nice work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:39, 20 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) * "The attack went awry when Stark anticipated the attack and infected Tarkin's fleet with a navigational computer virus." - The "attack" repetition is a tad dull. Thefourdotelipsis 14:25, 22 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **Good catch. Changed. Havac 16:29, 22 May 2009 (UTC)

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