Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Darth Arho


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Darth Arho

 * Nominated by: Obnoxioussith 13:49, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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Object
 * 1) Exiled Jedi
 * 2) * "Darth Arho was a male human Dark Lord of the Sith of the resurgent Sith Empire and a Dark Councilor." This would be a lot clearer if you said that he was a Dark Lord of the Sith and a Dark Counciler before mentioning the faction he worked for. It is slightly confusing the way it is currently written.
 * 3) * "...with one goal: to obliterate his enemies." Please reword this somewhere along the lines of "with the single goal of obliterating his enemies."
 * 4) *Is there any information on who his enemies on Ilum were?
 * 5) * "A natural successor to the warlike Darth Vengean, whose death resulted in significant internal strife among the Sith." Currently this is not even a sentence, could you rework it to make it one?
 * 6) *You need to mention the infobox information on his general appearance in the main part of the article.
 * 7) **No, I meant for you to add information such as him being bald/skin color/eye color to the article.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  21:15, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 8) *You also need to mention his apprentice in the main part of the article.
 * 9) **Is there any information about how he interacted/worked with his apprentice?-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  21:15, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 10) *Currently the article does not say when he was living except in the infobox, please mention the timeframe he was depicted in. Just remember to not to use the Old Republic era in the body of the article, since that in not a term used in-universe.
 * 11) **I think I might have confused you, having the Old Republic era in the infobox is fine, you just need to mention a year or timeframe in the body of the article, and this is what cannot be linked to the Old Republic era.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  21:15, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 12) *I'll look over the article again after you make these changes.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  17:50, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 13) *When nominating an article for CA it is important to include as much information about the character as possible. It would be a good idea to check for any information that you might of missed in order to create an article that can be judged comprehensive. You also need to include everything found in the infobox in the main part of the article. You should also try and get an image of the guy as well as a quote spoken by him if possible. Once you work on these objections and 501st Dogma's I will look at the article again.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  21:15, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 14) 501st
 * 15) * In the infobox, 3,641 BBY is not an era.
 * 16) *Please source the article. Even though it is not required by CA stadards, you should get into the habit of doing so.
 * 17) * No mention of his death in the whole article.
 * 18) * Who struck the blows that drove Darth Arho to push for the defeat?
 * 19) *Once you've addressed these I'll look over it again. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 20:15, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 20) * Darth Arho was relatively removed from the powerplays of other Dark Councilors.Therefore his warlike personality was often used by Dark Councilors against one another- very "clunky" couple of sentences. Try to contect them.
 * 21) * You mention Arho chocked one of his Sith. Why did he do it?
 * 22) **Have now said so. In the game, Arho chokes the Sith, and then uses the Dark Side to make his throat explode. Do you know what this ability is called?--Obnoxioussith 14:46, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Truthfuly I do not know what that ability is. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 19:16, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 24) * Try to put something into the last paragraph about Malgus, since Arho was sent to defeat Malgus.
 * 25) *The article is currently at 254 words, 4 words more than the maximum for a comprehensive. I suggest satisfying all of our objections before you move it to good article nominations.
 * 26) *You will need an intro also when this is moved to Good nom.
 * 27) *Looking better. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 13:26, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 28) *Maybe write a Power and abilities section. You could put in his use of Force choke and how he made the Sith's throat explode. 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 19:16, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 29) Nayayen
 * 30) *You should mention his appointment to the Dark Council before describing his tenure on it.
 * 31) * Do we know anything more about his mission to Ilum? Is it even a quest that the player can take part in, if so, I'd think there'd be more info to add. At any rate, linking to it (and creating an article for it, even as a stub if need be) would be good.
 * 32) * How did he appear in TOR? Is he mentioned in the Codex; does he appear in a cutscene of the Dark Council; or is even an NPC that takes a role in a quest?
 * 33) *Given that Imageless is an "improvement" tag, please try and track down an image of him. If need be, you can ask either in the Senate Hall or on IRC to see if someone can get a screenshot for you.
 * 34) **I have an image of him, but I am unable to upload on to WP. Should I just go to the Senate Hall instead?--Obnoxioussith 14:46, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 35) ***The first thing you might want to do is check that you've confirmed your email listed in Special:Preferences as you need to have done that to be able to upload. If you have done that then, yeah, either Senate Hall or IRC would be a good place to ask.  nayayen ★talk  20:49, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 36) *As with the others, I'll have another look when these have all been addressed.  nayayen ★talk  23:13, March 10, 2012 (UTC)
 * 37) Jinzler
 * 38) * The second paragraph of the article appears to have been almost directly copied from the TOR codex. This is a serious breach of Wookieepedia's copyright policy; you need to re-write the section in your own words, or else the entire paragraph will have to be removed. --Jinzler 09:44, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 39) **Done, thanks for that advice.--Obnoxioussith 14:46, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 40) *The article is now longer than 250 words and is therefore ineligible to become a "Comprehensive article." However, do not despair, because if you are genuinely committed to improving the article then once you have dealt with the above objections, you may want to consider nominating it as a goood article. If you require any advice or assistance, then feel free to ask myself or any of the above reviewers. Cheers. --Jinzler 19:53, March 11, 2012 (UTC)
 * 41) **Thanks for that advice. I think I need to replay the flashpoint to get some quotes and more detail on Arho and his character. I also think it would probably be good to look at current GAs to see what standard needs to be reached. Thanks for the help.--Obnoxioussith 20:38, March 11, 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * Just a note to the ECs, this has had unaddressed objections for over a week now and so should be archived as unsuccessful soon.  nayayen ★talk  01:12, March 20, 2012 (UTC)
 * I've left a message on his talk page, so we'll see what becomes of it over the next few days.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 01:20, March 20, 2012 (UTC)