Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations



This page is for the nomination of "comprehensive articles". For a list of "comprehensive articles", see Category:Wookieepedia comprehensive articles.


 * Comprehensive article nominations history
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What is a "comprehensive article?"

A "comprehensive article" is an article that contains all information regarding the topic. Often, "comprehensive articles" cannot reach Featured or Good Article status due to their limited content. This process is intended to recognize articles that contain all relevant canon information, yet are still under the 250 word limit required for a Good Article. The purpose of this is twofold&mdash;firstly, to help users distinguish what is a stub, and what is merely a short article with no further relevant material to be added, and, more importantly, to highlight for the reader when they are reading something that has been judged definitely "comprehensive"&mdash;that is, a guarantee to the reader that whatever they are reading contains the sum total of all available content.

Nominations and promotions of the Comprehensive article process are overseen by a collective of users known as the "EduCorps," which is made up of the Inquisitorius, the AgriCorps, and various other experienced users who are considered qualified to adequately judge the nominated material.

Lucasfilm Ltd. and its many licensees continue to expand the Star Wars universe. Since new information might become available, it may be necessary to revoke a "comprehensive article's" status. A forum will be used to nominate articles that have fallen out-of-date. Members of the EduCorps will then post a warning template on that page, and a grace period of one week will be instituted in which the article can be improved. If there is a significant amount of new information, it is likely that once updated, the article will become eligible for Good article status, and thereby ineligible for Comprehensive article status.

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia. This is, of course, within reason. If a topic only has a very limited degree of content that cannot be divided up into the relevant article sections, it is not required that it follow the Layout Guide precisely. This is to be judged on a case-by-case basis.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have no redlinks.
 * 8) &hellip;have all relevant canon information presented.
 * 9) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information. While this is not required for an article possessing a singular source, it is encouraged, as it provides both uniformity and a good infrastructure should the topic be referenced in any future materials.
 * 10) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 11) &hellip;provide at least one relevant quote on the article if available.
 * 12) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section for In-Universe articles.
 * 13) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, must not exceed 250 words in length (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Any articles exceeding the limit should be taken to the Good Article nominations page for consideration.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of comprehensive status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all thirteen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add CAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article in accordance with the established rules.
 * 5) Nominators and supporters will adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied. Objectors may also make alterations&mdash;if there is any reason for contention on a given point, it should be settled in a civil manner in the nomination field itself.
 * 6) Users may not vote on their own articles.
 * 7) There is no limit to the amount of nominations a given user can submit at any given time.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) There are several ways in which an article can receive the required number of votes. Within a 48-hour period of nomination, only EduCorps votes will count towards the total, although anyone may choose to vote in that window. If two members of the EduCorps support a nomination in that window, and there are no outstanding objections, the article can be considered a "Comprehensive article" and be tagged with the template 48 hours after the initial nomination.  The talk page will also be tagged with the CA template. When the 48 hours are up, any user's votes will contribute towards the total. If one EduCorps member has voted for an article after a week, three regular votes will be required. After the 48 hour period, an article can still also pass with just two EduCorps votes.
 * 6) Once a nomination is successful, it will be placed on the Comprehensive article list. Instructions on how to archive nominations, successful or otherwise, can be found here. Anyone can archive a nomination&mdash;just make sure it has the correct number of votes, has been nominated for at least a week (or 48 hours if there are two EC votes), and that there are absolutely no outstanding objections. If you are not sure how to do this, just ask, and someone will likely be more than willing to help you. Also, if you think you can slip one past us, think again&mdash;someone is always watching you.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to instantaneous removal by EduCorps members if objections are not addressed, or at least not answered, after a period of 2 weeks.

Drexl-class starfighter

 * Nominated by:Omicron 17:18, September 20, 2010 (UTC):
 * Nomination comments:Interesting article about a previously unknown starship

(0 ECs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support
 * Omicron 17:18, September 20, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu: A few basics
 * 2) * Remember to capitalize in the infobox.
 * 3) * Some spacing problems in the infobox.
 * 4) * Check for linking.
 * 5) ** This remains to a large degree. For example, in the infobox, the manufacturer should be SoroSuub Corporation, starfighter should be linked, credits has been unnecessarily linked twice, kg could be linked, and days could be linked to Galactic Standard Calendar. Please go through the entire article to fix these sorts of things up.
 * 6) *** Still not fixed. Please make an attempt to address this. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:52, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) * Quite a lot of infobox stuff that has no mention in the body.
 * 8) **Not fixed. The description should contain info on the crew, consumables, etc. You might even be able to push the word count over 250.
 * 9) ***think I've addressed this with some rewrites.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **** Used cost still missing. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) *****fixed.<-Omicron 00:57, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) *There are a number of other problems I'll put up once these are addressed. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:01, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) **Ok, I've tried to address your objections, let me know what else needs to be done.<-Omicron 14:31, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) Makashi
 * 15) * Linking problems remain. I put some stuff on your talk page.
 * 16) **Fixed what you suggested.
 * 17) * It was named for the predatory bird native to the moon of Dxun. Can this be confirmed? If not, it should be in the bts.
 * 18) **source specifically states this.
 * 19) *** Link to Drexl. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:25, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) ****Done.Omicron 17:22, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) * Its use by customs agencies should be in History, not Characteristics.
 * 22) **moved
 * 23) * Why no mention of SoroSuub in the body?
 * 24) **state in History that SoroSuub engineers revisited their design, not sure what else to mention.
 * 25) *** You haven't even established what it is when you say that. You should say something like The Drexl-class was originally conceived by SoroSuub Corporation as a prototype, otherwise, it sounds thrown in. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:25, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) ****added.Omicron 17:26, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) *Introduction could be expanded a bit.
 * 28) **not sure what more I could add, the source is only 3 paragraphs.
 * 29) ***rewrote intro to include more information.<-Omicron 01:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) * It appears that the difference It appears that? Wookieepedia deals with facts, and only facts.
 * 31) *Retcon is defined as "changing" previous canon. This has not been done, I think. There was simply an depiction contradiction in canon, and The Unknown Regions stepped in, stating that the Drexl was a prototype.
 * 32) **rewrote BTS to remove speculation
 * 33) ***Much better, but what you've said is that "There was a visual discrepancy between two sources. A third source stepped in and said that a prototype existed". This itself doesn't solve the discrepancy, unless the image was retconned to a Drexl. If there was, then it should be stated. If there was no retcon to say that the Gamer issue was a Drexl, then it should say something like "Regions addressed this by depicting a starfighter similar in appearance to the Gamer image and naming it the Drexl, without specifically retconning the old image." SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:25, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) ****ok rewrote the BTS some, trying to rephrase the similar appearance. Let me know what you think.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) * Remember to italisize class names and sources.
 * 36) **done
 * 37) * Specify which Gamer issue you're talking about.
 * 38) **done
 * 39) * Watch your spacing. I'm seeing two, three, and even four spaces between sentences. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:03, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 40) **This remains. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:25, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) ***think I fixed all of them. Should be 2 spaces between every sentence in the article.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 42) ****Definitely not. 1 space between sentences is correct. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) *****fixed.<-Omicron 00:57, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) Jujiggum
 * 45) *Intro needs to be expanded. There is plenty of info from the main body that you could summarize in the intro.
 * 46) **again, not sure what else could be added to the intro. It's an introduction, I don't think it should be full of facts or more than one sentence.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) ***There is a ton of applicable info that you could appropriately summarize. At least what it was primarily used for (short-range combat/planetary defense), the fact that it was armed with a laser cannon and missile launcher, and what it was named for could all be touched on briefly. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:17, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ****rewrote intro to include more information.<-Omicron 01:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) *****You could still add some more: at a minimum what it was named for and its primary purpose, and it would probably be best to also mention that it was originally shelved. If you're worried about the intro becoming too long in comparison to the body, please note my objection below that notes that you still have information in the infobox that isn't present in the body, so the article body still needs to be expanded, too. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:47, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 50) ******I don't know what is missing. Every fact from the infobox is in the article. Manufacturer,cost, armament, class, crew, usage, etc.<-15:21, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 51) ******* You are missing its military-only availability. Also, if you believe you have fixed an objection (such as the one in question below) please note as such beneath the objection itself, so that I know to check for it. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:45, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) ********added to Characteristics section.<-Omicron 15:52, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 53) * In the intro and in the first mention in the body you just call it the "Drexl-class," neglecting to mention "starfighter" in the name. Was "starfighter" part of the actual name, or was it just known as "Drexl-class?" If "starfighter" was actually part of the name, then this needs to also be bolded in the intro and should be added to at least the first mention in the main body.
 * 54) **I believe starfighter is just what it is, not part of the proper name. Source calls is Drexl-class, Drexl-class starfighter and Drexl-class fighter, so I am assuming the Name is Drexl-class.<-Omicron 19:12, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 55) ***No, you should use the fullest name that the source calls it: the "Drexl-class starfighter." The other two sound like just short "nicknames" for it, if you will. Please adjust the article accordingly. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 22:41, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 56) ****fixed.<-Omicron 22:44, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 57) * Please fill in the eras template if an era is known; and if it isn't known, then remove the template from the article.
 * 58) **added.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 59) * By "2-person" do you mean 2 Humans or 2 beings in general?
 * 60) **doesn't say, I am assuming that when it says 2 person crew, they are specifying 2 medium-sized humanoids unless otherwise stated(IE: in the case of the Rogue-class Porax-38 starfighter.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 61) * "It cost 165,000 credits new." Which "it?" The consumables, the cargo, or the ship? (Yes, I know you mean the ship, but this is worded so that it is grammatically referring to the cargo or the consumables)
 * 62) **fixed.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 63) * "It was armed&hellip;" Please don't start a new paragraph with "It;" be more specific on the first mention of something in the paragraph so that the reader knows for certain what you're talking about.
 * 64) **fixed.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 65) * "As the developers moved to new ideas, the design was shelved." Which design was shelved? Drexl or Preybird?
 * 66) **rewrote a bit to make this more clear.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 67) ***This is still a little confusing as to which one was shelved. The "initial design" could still refer to either one. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:17, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 68) ****reworded to be a bit more clear.<-Omicron 01:41, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 69) *****This remains. The intial design for which starfighter? You still have not clarified this at all. All you have to do is say "&hellip;the original design for the Preybird/Drexl-class starfighter&hellip" instead of just "&hellip;original design for the starfighter&hellip;" I would fix this myself but I'm unfamiliar with the source material so I'm not sure which one it actually is. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:47, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 70) ******ok rewrote this section. <-Omicron 15:38, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 71) * No punctuation in images unless the caption is a complete sentence.
 * 72) **fixed.<-Omicron 21:45, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 73) *"Star Wars Gamer 4 had an image in the article&hellip;" Could you specify what the image was of sooner?
 * 74) *"It was identified as a Preybird-class starfighter, but did not look like other images of the Preybird-class from The Last Command Sourcebook." Do you mean to suggest that it looked more like a Drexl than a Preybird? If so, then please specify this.
 * 75) *"The Unknown Regions sourcebook addressed this fact&hellip;" Is this perhaps a retcon?
 * 76) **I'm currently checking that with him. As far as I know, I don't think it qualifies as a retcon, because no previous canon was changed, although it does seem to imply that the image was, in fact, a Drexl. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 14:39, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 77) * Also, there is information missing in the article that is present in the infobox.
 * 78) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 13:59, October 1, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Ok I've rewrote the article a bit to address some concerns. Please let me know if there are any other suggestions/objections. Thanks. <-Omicron 17:45, September 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Note: This article is currently above 250 words, and the intro has room for expansion. Once my objections and Jug's are fixed up, you should request for removal and take it to GAN. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:36, October 6, 2010 (UTC)

Borvo the Hutt's starfighter

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 23:17, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Cannon fodder

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) NAYA   YEN   18:59, September 22, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) * Just one: "...and starfighters had a small cross-section" Eh? Even if you put "the" in there, it still sounds odd. Reword? NAYA   YEN   23:27, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) **I put "profile" instead. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Just at first glance, the intro could use a slight expansion.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 15:04, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Too much? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:22, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Maybe cut it down a tiny bit, but not a whole lot. Also, please make the first sentence less redundant. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 01:27, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Done. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:54, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Jujiggum's full review
 * 8) * Please change the beginning of the History and/or Characteristics section, since they start the same exact way.
 * 9) **Mixed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) * You say "several missions" but you only link one mission.
 * 11) **More added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) ***I've been thinking about this, and I think a better way to do it would be to say "&hellip;several missions, including&hellip;" And then list a few missions separately. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 21:23, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) ****Sure, links moved. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:38, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *****Okay, but please check your grammar here. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 14:47, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) ******Conjunctions added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:07, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * "Other starfighters" This isn't clear whether you mean some more of this particular class of fighter or a completely different type of starfighter.
 * 17) **Additional. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) * "destroying or driving off the starfighters" Just a slight wording issue: this sounds like we don't know which happened, whereas I believe you mean that some were destroyed while some were driven off.
 * 19) **Reworded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * "his personal starfighter" Which his? Sykes' or Kotha's? (Yeah, I know you mean Kotha's but the wording here isn't very clear)
 * 21) **Fixed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) ***"and continued to fly in his personal starfighter as Sykes' wingmen" Huh? Do you mean wingmate? Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 21:23, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) ****Hmn. I guess I should not have transposed the link/pipe. Fixed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:12, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) * I don't believe you should have the complement section filled in the infobox; that is for the vehicles/ships/troops that a ship can carry. And since these starfighters have only one pilot&hellip; That said, you also need to fill in the "Crew" section of the infobox.
 * 25) **Taken care of. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 15:39, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) You need a sources section, as well as references in the infobox and text.-- ID-21 Dolphin  DolphinJedi.png(Talk) 20:10, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) *Nope; per WP:S, "Articles with only one source or appearance may be sourced, although it is not required." Furthermore, the starfighter appeared only in the video game, which is an "appearance," not a "source," so no Sources section is necessary (unless you can name a source in which this starfighter appeared). Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 20:19, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) **Oh, well. I added the refs; and no sources, as the starfighters appear in neither the instruction manual nor the CSWE. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:34, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) You are currently at 263 words, so the article is no longer eligible for CA status, I'd suggest taking this to the GAN. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 22:23, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) *Noted, but do you think it could be a GA as it stands? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:16, October 14, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Disabled Trade Federation base

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 23:17, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It's a trap!

(0 ECs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Intro could use some expansion.
 * 3) * Unsourced infobox items.
 * 4) **Nixed.
 * 5) * Punctuation before refs.
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) * Linking.
 * 8) **Some more linked.
 * 9) * I'm not entirely sure what controls the base's defences just from reading the article? Is it that the Central Control Computer normally controls it, but the base is also capable of running independently? Or was the entire thing about Comm 4 having any part in its operation a ruse? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:31, October 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Thanks for catching all that. The situation should be more clear now regarding the control. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 16:31, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Better but now you say that it was reactivated without ever mentioning what caused it to deactivate. Also, is it known what allowed it to reactivate? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:42, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) * Prior to attacking the base, This is notable. Instead of using it as context, it should be directly stated that the Naboo planned a strike against the base.
 * 13) **Expanded.
 * 14) ***Not fixed, on second reading. I should be stated directly. Basically, you should say that the underground formulated a plan to attack the base. Then you can talk about Comm 4 as you have done. The gunboat and slave camp free-ing can be talked about later, with the mention of Gavin Sykes. I think this would streamline the article. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:02, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) ****How is that? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:39, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) * How much control does the CCC actually have over this base? Does it entirely control it, or does it give only "commands"? This could be clarified in characteristics.
 * 17) **Here's what we know. The TF has a 'comm web' and Comm 4 is part of it. Destroying comm 4 will disrupt the web and force the base to hibernate. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:51, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Then this should be more specifically noted in the article. If there isn't much detail on a subject, or if it's vague, just say what the source says. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:33, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****How does it read now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:06, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) * After a running battle, most of the base would lie in rubble. Lieutenant Gavyn Sykes blew up the shield generator protecting the command center. For the base to lie in rubble, wouldn't the second sentence have to occur first? Also, could you reword the first sentence? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:42, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) **Reworded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:51, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) * How come there's no mention of the Neimodian population in the body?
 * 23) **Does it flow now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:39, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) *The River article says he came downriver, but this article says he went up it. Which is correct?
 * 25) **According to dialogue, upriver. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:39, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) ***The characteristics section is very clean now. But I think that's a contradiction. I the games' case, they used the word to describe just going along the river, however, its general meaning is "towards the source". I know you're just taking it verbatim, but perhaps if you just changed it to "down the river"? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:11, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) ****Okay, so changed.
 * 28) * After destroying Comm 4, the Naboo pilots descended from orbit and began their sorties against the base, and the Federation defenses reactivated and commenced firing on the Naboo ships. Split the sentence. Also, if the reason for the reactivation is unknwon, could you at least add in "unexpectedly reactivated" to make it clear?
 * 29) *I'm beginning to question the name of the article. It wasn't truly disabled, nor was it always disabled. Could it be renamed?
 * 30) **Only if I have to move it once. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:12, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Hmmm? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:11, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) ****What I mean is, if you tell me specifically what to move it to, I will. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower
 * 33) *****There's quite alot of freedom with conjecture names; something simple like "Trade Federation base (Naboo)" would do. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:10, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) * The article says that it was located near the mouth of the river. Are you sure you don't mean to headwaters? The mouth is where it ends (I believe that's the swamp).
 * 35) **I suppose. It just starts at the end of the canyon and flows all quite a ways. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 00:12, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) *I know I'm being picky here, but I'm just trying to make the article as clear as possible :) It's getting there. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:02, October 8, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Once again, Soresumakashi has forced my CA to go to GA status. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:51, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Look on the bright side :D SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:02, October 8, 2010 (UTC)

Andrevea River

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A really long river

(0 ECs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) ~ SavageBob 05:10, October 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * Prepare to be savaged...
 * Please at least stub the swamp.
 * In my opinion, there is too little information even to stub the swamp. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:04, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, well, if the Grey Cadre overrule my objection, that's cool, but I think even a stub is better than nothing. It's a canonical subject that we know exists, even if we don't know much about it. ~ SavageBob 00:28, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * The swamp isn't even referenced in the game, just in the CSWE. And that doesn't provide anything to put in an article, just that "a swamp existed." Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:26, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, if you feel strongly about it, feel free to ignore the objection. I stand by it, though, as the swamp is a canonical subject, even if all we know is that it was on Naboo and the river emptied into it. If the Grey Cadre feels my objection is unwarranted, they'll ignore it and pass the article. ~ SavageBob 03:38, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * I think this is one of those grey (no pun intended) areas that can be left to the discretion of the nominator. Although, if such an article was made, one would also have to be made on Naboo's polar regions. And Bob, you know the EC does not and can not just ignore an objection. It's against the rules. You either have to be satisfied and strike your objection, or involve the EC, which will make a judgement on the objection's validity, and uphold it if necessary. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:03, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * To me, a swamp is like a river, an ocean, a lake, etc. It's a bounded waterform that probably has an official name; we just don't know it. A "polar region" on the other hand is a more vague land area, something that isn't reckoned the same way as the Black Sea or the Blue Lagoon or the Atchafalaya Swamp. So, yeah, I don't want to be a jerk here, but if CP feels strongly that we don't need an article on the swamp, I'd like the GC to make a call. ~ SavageBob 15:17, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, if the swamp article would be made, it would have precisely one sentence and yet still be complete. As some admin said, 'this isn't the third stormtrooper to the left' wiki. As a side note, there is a red link for the swamps where a trading village rests. It may or may not be the same swamp. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:14, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * In terms of an individual article, I don't believe that there is a need for such an article. I wouldn't mind its existence, but I wouldn't see it as necessary. What about an article for the swamps of Naboo as a compromise then? There's plenty of info, even outside the game, that could go in there. It could contain some useful, unique information, and hopefully satisfy both sides. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:47, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Do you mean one article on all the swamps of Naboo lumped together? I'd be against that, simply for the precedent it'd set or stuff like Oceans of Chandrila and Mountains of Tatooine and the like. CP, are you fundamentally against the idea of an article on the swamp we're debating? If that's not the case, I'll write it and support the article! :) ~ SavageBob 03:38, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, not fundamentally against the idea. If you feel there is enough information from the CSWE, then go ahead. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 19:09, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * Which article in the CSWE is it that mentions the swamp? I was ready to make the swamp article, but I checked the entry on "Adrevea", and all it says is that it was a river on Naboo, with no mention of a swamp. It is in some other entry? ~ SavageBob 16:59, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * The entry for Ferentina, as the ref note says. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 18:48, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * Needs a BTS section. Tis all. ~ SavageBob 20:05, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the suggestions. BTS added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:04, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Soresu
 * Remove the TOC.
 * It appears automatically when we have several subsections. It can't be removed--can it? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * See my edit. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:21, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Again, date the invasion of Naboo.
 * Done. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * In the bts, could you elaborate more on the River's involvement in the game? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:03, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, I expanded the action during the body. Sorry, couldn't stop once I started. Anyhoo, I added a small detail to the BTS. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:32, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * The camps were later liberated by members of Bravo Squadron. Lieutenant Gavyn Sykes utilized a stolen Federation gunboat to travel downriver from a disabled Trade Federation base to the mainland river delta, where the camps had been established. Upon releasing the prisoners, Please stay chronological here. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:21, October 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sentences combined. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:09, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * There seems to be some relevant info in the disabled base article that could be in here, such as the mines.
 * Looks like it could be given a History section. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:04, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * Both added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:44, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * Same as the disabled base: could upriver be changed to "down the river"?
 * During the Trade Federation invasion of the planet in 32 BBY,[2] the Federation established slave camps for Naboo citizens on the banks of the river. Needs to be stated that the base lay near the river's source. In addition, a direct statement about the destruction of the base would be good: In order to liberate the camps, Lieutenant Gavyn Sykes of Bravo Squadron utilized a stolen Federation gunboat to travel upriver from a disabled Trade Federation base. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:39, October 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * How are the changes regarding these two? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:33, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

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Ferentina

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Kindly ignore the fact it was once named "Unidentified Naboo town"

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Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) *Why is all that stuff in the intro about nearby landmarks not anywhere else? This could warrant a description section.
 * 3) *Furthermore, for the description, you could extrapolate some more info from the image. For example, it's bordered by a steep hill on one side, plus that... whatever it is... on the opposite side.
 * 4) *During the Invasion of Naboo in the year 32 BBY,[1] the Trade Federation Droid Army attacked Ferentina, which was serving as a refugee camp. The fact that it was a refugee camp needs to be directly established ie. When the Trade Federation invaded Naboo in 32 BBY, Feretina served as a refugee camp for the Naboo people.
 * 5) *the bridge. The? You haven't yet established which bridge you're talking about.
 * 6) *the survivors Survivors of what? Be specific.
 * 7) *Is it possible to get an image of the destroyed city? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 00:26, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **...I've proven again and again that the N64 version does not provide quality images. Maybe someone with the PC version could add one. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:24, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Okay, I rewrote the article. You can check it out. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:24, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

I don't know whether or not turning these CAs into GAs is a positive or negative attribute. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:24, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

Porso Hill

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Place of a Hutt's comeuppance

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Support
 * 1) I moved the game template to only encompass the optional stuff. Looks good! ~ SavageBob 03:39, October 1, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * Prepare to be savaged...
 * Yeah, I'm not sure why the game template is there. Is there a possibility that if the player takes other actions that the hill won't be surrounded by islands? That there were no missile launchers on them? That the vehicular upgrade wasn't there? It seems odd that any of this stuff might not be there based merely on player actions. ~ SavageBob 20:02, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, all of it is there no matter what; the mechanics is the player's choice to pick up the upgrade. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:06, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, in that case, I think the template can be removed. You're not stating anything that varies based on player characater actions; you don't even mention that anyone ever picked up the upgrade. ~ SavageBob 01:34, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * I added info about Sykes picking up the upgrade. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:26, October 1, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Is the "gamemechanics template" too much? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:30, September 22, 2010 (UTC)

Widow's Valley

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: So named for the unstable spires.

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Support
 * 1)  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 20:09, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  1358  (Talk) 16:33, October 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Karika
 * 2) * The body could be split up into three sentences.
 * 3) ** Needs a BtS.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 16:26, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Done. Thanks for the suggestion. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:01, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Xd1358
 * 6) * "...near the south ridge of the city of Theed." Reads awkwardly. Perhaps the capital city Theed instead?
 * 7) * "Sykes was a pilot of the Royal Naboo Security Forces and flew through the Valley during a battle against the Trade Federation Droid Army at the end of the Invasion of Naboo in 32 BBY." Okay, this is a weird sentence. You must get this and the earlier sentence to run smoother. Please see what phrasing adjustments you can make. 1358  (Talk) 21:47, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **How does it read now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:48, September 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) ***It's still pretty choppy. It's like, which is not good.  1358  (Talk) 19:30, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) ****Is there an improvement now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:33, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) The Wizard did it
 * 12) *There needs to be some resolution to the battle. Did the Security Forces win, or the Federation? --''' Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 15:32, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) **Details once thought irrelevant are now added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 01:55, October 12, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * I could find a quote if necessary. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Um...where's the page? =/ --''' Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 21:44, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * I don't know; it won't show up when running a search for it. The only way to go to it is through a page which links to it (BFN appearances or Battle of the south ridge). Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:50, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * The apostrophe was different. --Eyrezer 23:10, September 22, 2010 (UTC)

Unidentified minelayer

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ~One second of screentime.

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Object
 * 1) I suggest you merge the intro and the history. There's no point of having them both in a super short article like this. 1358  (Talk) 11:45, September 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Okay, so moved. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:26, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) "It's never the first one!"
 * 2) *Your sentences are very choppy.
 * 3) *I know CAs are lax about following the layout guide, but you could definitely write a Characteristics section for this. That also means you'd have to write a brief History if not a Role section as well. See here.
 * 4) *Your BTS could also use more information, i.e., which level they appeared in and who made the game. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo.png 01:54, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **How does the article look now? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 02:28, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) ***First, the Intro and History are too similar. You must reword the sentences and, ideally, have a significant difference in length (shorten the intro).
 * 7) ****Done. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:55, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *** Give the title of the level in the Bts.
 * 9) ****Added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:55, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) ***JFFR, when someone asks for who made the game, they mean the developers (in this case Factor 5), not LucasArts.
 * 11) ***The Characteristics section should include a physical description. I still suggest a Role section, but due to the History section detailing what would be in it, I will not push for one. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) ****"Tan colored flying blocks." Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:55, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) *****Those aren't simply blocks. For example (Don't phrase it like ths in the article) The tops are pyramids, the bodies are square, and they have four drops on each corner of the body. And of course they fly. They're starfighters. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) ******Expanded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:37, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) *******Do you know what kind of mines? NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:36, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ********Floating proximity mines. I am sure we don't have an article on them. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 19:02, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) * Are they actually called "minelayers" in the game? If not they cannot be referred to as such in the article. It should instead read "ship" or some equivalent. It can also say they were used as minelayers if that is the case. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) **Name changed. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:55, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) * A mention of Sykes being in the stolen gunboat, concealing his identity from the minelayers, should be added. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *Added. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:55, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) *Sorry, I overestimated my free time, so I fixed certain things myself. It'll take time for me to get back to you on the other things as well. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *That they are affiliated with the TF Droid Army is currently only in the infobox. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **Heh. Not anymore. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:37, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Who wants to place bets on whether I have to move the page? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:25, September 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Yes, it needs to be moved to Unidentified minelayer. :P 1358  (Talk) 12:10, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Just UnID minelalyer, and not UnID minelayer (TF)? Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:01, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, if there are no other unidentified minelayers, no (TF) is needed. 1358  (Talk) 13:49, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Page moved

Corellian flame miniatures

 * Nominated by: — Hunter Kahn  15:31, September 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: If it's good enough for Thrawn, it's good enough for me...

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 * 1) Menkooroo 15:13, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) ~ SavageBob 22:03, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:55, October 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) * I googled "Goorlish", and it looks like it's a uniquely SW-word --- any idea what it means? Is some sort of article in order?
 * 2) **I'm not entirely sure what it means. The source only refers to "Goorlish light sources" in the same context as the article now does. I had thought perhaps it was a reference to the planet Goorla, but didn't link to it because I can't be sure... — Hunter Kahn  15:06, September 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) ***Probably best to create a stub for "Goorlish light sources", then, that references the flame miniatures. Menkooroo 03:46, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ****Done. — Hunter Kahn  13:53, September 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) * Super nitpicky, but: "Those fibers were then shaped into extremely delicate sculptures in the shape of an luminescent blaze" makes it sound like all of the sculptures together make up a single luminescent blaze.
 * 6) **I think I clarified it. Let me know. — Hunter Kahn  15:06, September 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Looks good but you changed the tense again! :^P Don't worry I fixed it.
 * 8) * "Although many have tried to do so" --- how dare you switch up the tense!!!!!!!!!!!!
 * 9) **lol Whoops. Fixed. — Hunter Kahn  15:06, September 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) * Yo, specify which issue of the DFR comic they appeared in in bts, appearances, and notes and references. S'all, baby doll! Menkooroo 13:59, September 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **Ok. — Hunter <font color="#595454">Kahn  15:06, September 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 13) * Just one: Can you recrop the image so as to exclude the original comic panel border? Otherwise, looks good. (BTW, I removed the line about them not having appeared in any other sources, since that line could theoretically appear on any article. But I won't cry if you restore it.) ~ SavageBob 20:44, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **I tried to upload the new crop. — <font color="#C0C0C0">Hunter <font color="#595454">Kahn  21:28, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) ***I still see the lines, but I think it's because the old image is still in the cache or something. Hopefully an admin can delete the older revisions and force a refresh. ~ SavageBob 22:03, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) Eyrezer: Did you check the CSWE? --Eyrezer 09:56, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) *I was under the impression it wasn't in there, but I don't have access to it myself at the moment. Could you perhaps check for me? — <font color="#C0C0C0">Hunter <font color="#595454">Kahn  14:32, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) *I was under the impression it wasn't in there, but I don't have access to it myself at the moment. Could you perhaps check for me? — <font color="#C0C0C0">Hunter <font color="#595454">Kahn  14:32, October 8, 2010 (UTC)

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Mantooine Minuet

 * Nominated by: Eyrezer 00:34, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Palpatine liked dance?

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Support
 * 1) What?&mdash;  07:05, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) "Lapti Nek," eat your heart out. ~ SavageBob 15:13, October 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Could you perhaps reorganize your sentences to make them a bit more chronological? Right now the information about Mara being captured seems superfluous. I'm certain it's not, but it doesn't fit in with the rest of the article as of now. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 09:10, September 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *I'm not sure of the best way to go about this. How does it look now? --Eyrezer 06:46, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Well the problem I have with it is that this: "Following his death in 4 ABY, Emperor's Hand Mara Jade was captured by Director of Imperial Intelligence Ysanne Isard. Isard considered Jade a threat as she knew only that the Emperor trusted Jade but was otherwise unable to ascertain any details about the woman who had presented herself as merely a dancer in the Imperial court. Following her capture, Jade was interrogated by Ivak, one of Isard's agents." seems to have very little to do with Mantooine Minuet. If you could perhaps reduce some of the unnecessary information, it would go a long way to clearing up the vital information on the subject. I know it's context, but that's not all necessary to understanding Mantooine Minuet and its history. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 07:34, October 12, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Thanks Cylka, for the CSWE entry. --Eyrezer 00:43, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * I wonder: should classical music be written up as an article? In other words, is it an in-universe genre on par with jatz and jizz and the like? ~ SavageBob 20:39, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * FWIW, it's mentioned in Planet of Twilight by a bartender. Menkooroo 04:40, October 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Added. Thanks for the additional source, Menk. --Eyrezer 06:37, October 4, 2010 (UTC)

Kalasaad Woztu

 * Nominated by:  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 13:55, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part 2

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 * 1) I feel lucky. Menkooroo 00:50, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Menk loves me.  1358  (Talk) 16:39, October 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Xd1358
 * 2) * "&hellip;the Outer Rim[2] planet Vorzyd V, a world famous for&hellip;" What? A world famous what? Also, do we really say world famous in the Star Wars universe?
 * 3) * "&hellip;including as the amusement park&hellip;" Improper English.
 * 4) *In the future, please make sure to proofread your work. 1358  (Talk) 21:00, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Both fixed.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 23:20, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **Sorry to butt in --- that first sentence actually said a world famous for... as in, it's a planet famous for its gambling. :^D Menkooroo 15:12, October 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Ah, I hate myself now. >_< 1358  (Talk) 16:59, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) ****But I love you, and that's all that matters. Nothing on Vorzyd V (a world famous for its gambling) can keep us apart! Menkooroo 00:24, October 6, 2010 (UTC)


 * 1) Whoa!
 * 2) * Right now, the majority of the article is sourced to The Essential Atlas and its online companion. The sourcing should look like: "Kalasaad Woztu was, in 22 BBY, the Prime Minister of the[1] Outer Rim[2] planet Vorzyd V ... and the beaches of the[1] Inner Rim[3] planet Amfar..." Currently, info from the Holonet Article is sourced to the Atlas. Menkooroo 15:12, October 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fixed.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 21:44, October 3, 2010 (UTC)

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Trading village (Naboo swamps)

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 15:04, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Who wants to go live in a swamp?

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Support
 * 1) ~ SavageBob 00:18, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 16:54, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Menkooroo 19:23, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * Prepare to be savaged...
 * "destroys every target." What are the targets? ~ SavageBob 16:00, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Reworded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:17, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * It's better, but the wording still assumes knowledge of how the game works. What are the "military targets?" Are they buildings? People? Weapons? ~ SavageBob 00:30, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * I am not sure how to word it. It is a scenario where every civilian/military sprite model (people, vehicles, fighters) is present and must be destroyed. No other objective. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 21:26, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * I added what you said. Hopefully it's accurate. ~ SavageBob 00:18, October 2, 2010 (UTC)


 * Looks great! But even though it's in the BTS, can you provide just a couple of words of context on Darth Maul and his Scimitar? Menkooroo 13:57, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sure thing. Slightly expanded. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 14:40, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * The context on the Scimitar is great. But I'm looking for something on Maul himself, too --- something like "Sith Lord", or, if you're feeling crazy, "villain from The Phantom Menace (after all, it IS bts :^P )". Menkooroo 16:43, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sith Lord it is. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 19:14, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Is it for sure that the village featured in the bonus level is the same village? It looks totally different. Any sources? Octurion 16:36, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * Absolutely. Its several sections of the village and the countrysde from the second level. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:55, September 24, 2010 (UTC)

Blackwater Systems

 * Nominated by: <font color="#208090"> Holocron Greatholocron.jpg <font color="#208090">(Complain) 05:22, September 25, 2010 (UTC):
 * Nomination comments: This place was pretty much a drug factory. Enjoy.

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 * 1)  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 15:28, October 7, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Karika
 * 2) * Context needed for Granta Omega, Falleen, Jenna Zan Arbor, Roy Teda, Anakin Skywalker, and Obi-Wan Kenobi.
 * 3) * Unless you can provide a source for the BtS note, it has to go.
 * 4) * refs are needed since there is more than one source.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 12:05, September 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **I believe I fixed these problems, the BtS note has been removed, refs were added and context was added. You had better check it though. <font color="#208090"> Holocron Greatholocron.jpg <font color="#208090">(Complain) 13:25, September 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *** Refs are also needed in the infobox.
 * 7) *** The article needs a short BtS, something along the lines of any other comprehensive article.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 22:12, September 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **** I added refs to the infobox. The BtS was based off of the one from this article. Also, I'm not going to have internet access until the 30/9 (9/30), so if more changes are needed I'll do them then. Don't think I've abandoned it. <font color="#208090"> Holocron  Greatholocron.jpg <font color="#208090">(Complain) 23:40, September 25, 2010 (UTC)


 * 1) Karika part 2
 * 2) *Blackwater's appearance in the CSWE should be mentioned in the BtS.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 12:29, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Done. <font color="#208090"> Holocron Greatholocron.jpg <font color="#208090">(Complain) 05:54, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *** You could probably condense the BtS into one paragraph.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 20:53, October 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Done. <font color="#208090"> Holocron Greatholocron.jpg <font color="#208090">(Complain) 04:37, October 3, 2010 (UTC)


 * 1) Karika impostor
 * 2) *It looks great! I'm just wondering if you can tell me more about these Senate Utility Tunnels. I haven't read the book, so I genuinely don't know --- the article mentions that they've been recreated, but it doesn't state what they are or where the original versions of them were. Each word is capitalized, which makes me wonder if it's a formal title --- do you think it's worthy of its own article? I'm confused and hoping you can enlighten me, and maybe provide a bit of context on them in the article, too. Again, great work! Menkooroo 13:50, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) *Since I went ahead and made the changes, I will list them here for when you get back. Make sure you link to everything possible in the article (Jude Watson was not linked).
 * 2) **I fixed the refs. If there is more than one, you do not need to keep adding the long version. There is a shorter reference note you can use, and you can implement it yourself in the rest of the article. Also, I recently learned this myself, if you have a ref in the infobox, you need to encase it in the "Reference" template. And one final thing, I think you need to source the era as well in the infobox. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 03:04, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) ***Thanks for the help. I changed the rest of the refs, though it didn't make all that much of a difference. <font color="#208090"> Holocron Greatholocron.jpg <font color="#208090">(Complain) 05:54, September 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Might do to add a brief comparison in the BTS section with the real Blackwater company. The novel was written and published around the time that Blackwater was in the media. While they may differ in their trade, both are secretive and have controversy. What do you think? Andykatib 03:24, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Unless there is a source for the connection, then no.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 12:29, September 26, 2010 (UTC)

Unidentified Garqian anthropoid

 * Nominated by: Eyrezer 01:49, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And another

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 * 1)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:39, October 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Menkooroo 04:51, October 3, 2010 (UTC)

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Fibersaw

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:37, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: For Walter

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 * 1) Slice! Menkooroo 03:10, October 17, 2010 (UTC)

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 * The article seems to be more about JK-13 security droids than it does fibersaws. I think it would be better to discuss the fibersaw first (it had razor-thin dimensions, it could slice through a droideka), and then make the comparison with the security droid afterward. Whaddya think? Menkooroo 03:10, October 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * I agree. Changed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:47, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

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Ossluk Noslee

 * Nominated by: Tm_T(Talk) 23:01, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "The Gand will tell you. But please tell no one." Whopsie?

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 * 1) <font face="Verdana">NAYA   <font face="Verdana">YEN   14:55, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) I'm not going to tell you my name, which is definately NOT Bob. Muhahahahahaha!!!--''' Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 00:22, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) I'd like to see more of these. Jurgan Kalta, perhaps?&mdash;  23:53, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  1358  (Talk) 20:10, October 16, 2010 (UTC)

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 * 1) "...have possibly been felled into the possession of..." Umm, what? :P  <font face="Verdana">NAYA   <font face="Verdana">YEN   23:08, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Better now? --Tm_T(Talk) 23:18, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **The sentence makes sense now, although I now notice the speculation (eg. possibly been acquired) which shouldn't be there. <font face="Verdana">NAYA   <font face="Verdana">YEN   23:26, October 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Indeed, speculation should be gone now. (: --Tm_T(Talk) 13:51, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) The Wizard did it
 * 6) * As mentioned above, nothing should "possibly" have happened or not happened.
 * 7) *"...acquired by the former Jedi Knight the Jedi Exile." Should be re-worded...the sentence reads slightly awkwardly.
 * 8) *There are various english errors on the page also. I've fixed them, but it would be best to read it over and make sure verything is fine.
 * 9) *--''' Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 00:42, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Ok now? --Tm_T(Talk) 13:51, October 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Yup. --''' Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 00:22, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Soresu
 * 13) * There is no intro, so remove the TOC.
 * 14) **Done.
 * 15) *If he's cut content, then shouldn't he be labelled as such?
 * 16) **He is still mentioned in the game via his gloves.
 * 17) ***Was the info in the bio all from the item description? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:58, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ****Yes, or other way, no cut content included in the bio. (: --Tm_T(Talk) 18:44, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) * Considering that most Gand never earned a name of their own Could this be explained? For example In Gand culture, ... SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 03:54, October 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **Done by simple mention, sufficient? (: --Tm_T(Talk) 12:19, October 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) Considering Sullustan is a species, you need to modify the Bts quote attribution to have "a Sullustan" or something like that.  1358  (Talk) 18:32, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *Timing++ (: --Tm_T(Talk) 18:44, October 16, 2010 (UTC)

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Darth Maladi's mother

 * Nominated by: &mdash; 20:02, October 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Going for the mother&hellip;

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 * 1) Clean as a whistle. Menkooroo 12:59, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:19, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

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Unidentified Gotal Sith

 * Nominated by: Menkooroo 19:02, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Gotal it on the mountain.

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 * 1) Over in the hills and everywhere!&mdash;  19:06, October 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Far to the hills we've to go.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:19, October 15, 2010 (UTC)

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