Wookieepedia:Inq/Second Battle of Borleias (Yuuzhan Vong War) (third review)

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Things to do

 * Conform article to layout prescribed in the LG for battles
 * General expansion and explanation:
 * Example: "Additionally, other familiar tactics such as yammosk jamming, stutter firing, and Jedi shadow bombs were also employed."
 * Prelude and aftermath sections are unbalanced and do not provide proper context or follow-through
 * While parenthetical statements are not necessarily evil, this one is: "Due to Borleias' proximity to Coruscant (or Yuuzhan'tar, as it was now called)"
 * Unsourced statements in BTS:
 * "The Second Battle of Borleias was mentioned several times in later New Jedi Order books"; "References in other works have also been made to Battle of Borleias, an in-universe documentary produced by Wolam Tser about the course of the battle."
 * Check for new information not presently found in the article from glossed-over sources in BTS, especially for the 'aftermath' of the battle.
 * Many paragraphs under "Arrival of Czulkang Lah" and especially "Second offensive" are extremely short and should probably be merged with each other. General rewrite is advised.

Removal of FA status

 * Placed on probation at Meeting 39.