Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Yomin Carr


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Yomin Carr

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:24, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first Yuuzhan Vong FA nom.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) DC 19:44, 21 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Some spelling errors, but corrected Enochf 23:35, 23 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) -  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 16:38, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Could stand a little more exposition on the duel but nice job. Cull Tremayne 01:58, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Ha, you gotta love the pictures. Greyman ( Talk ) 13:38, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:04, 18 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan ( Talk ) 03:38, 26 October 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) DC
 * 2) * "The team decided to send three people in an old Spacecaster ship." Who are they, besides from Danni Quee, whom you already mentioned was going.
 * 3) **Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:47, 21 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Explain how Da'Gara captured Quee and killed the other two scientists.
 * 5) **Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:47, 21 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * "He informed him that a team was heading for Helska IV, where the "asteroid" had crashed." You had told us that the object intruduing the galaxy was a comet. Which is it?
 * 7) **Good catch. Fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:47, 21 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *Good article. DC 21:20, 20 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
 * 10) * Context on who Prefect Da'Gara is upon first introduction is needed.
 * 11) **Got it.
 * 12) * Belkadan would also be harmed from Carr's beetles, which were quickly converting the atmosphere to toxic gases. Is "harmed" correct here? I thought Belkadan was being terraformed for use as a shipyard?
 * 13) **Changed.
 * 14) * You have the team reacting to the warning from the Spacecaster after you mention it was destroyed at Helska IV. Shouldn't the mention of its destruction happen after this?
 * 15) **Fixed.
 * 16) * I haven't read VP for a while, but didn't Carr unmask himself to Cadmir because he believed he was worthy of a good death for his efforts in surviving the forest?
 * 17) **Yes. Added.
 * 18) * How did the ExGal distress call get sent when the comms tower was down? - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 12:47, 8 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Fixed. Thanks for the review.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 15:33, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 21) * Perhaps a Legacy section is in order. Other than that, I can't complain. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 00:58, 16 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Added one.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:06, 16 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) I'm a little unsure about some of the early bio info. It says that he was sent by the Praetorite Vong, but my impression was that he was one of Anor's agents - his contact with Da'Gara all went through Anor. I haven't checked Vector Prime but I'd like you to have a look and see. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:11, 19 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) From Graestan the Cruel:
 * 25) * Not so sure we should capitalize the names of the castes other than the Shamed Ones, per Harrar's many YVW FA precedents.
 * 26) **You seem to have fixed that yourself, unless I'm missing something.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:40, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) ***"Warrior" is still capitalized twice. Did you think I meant the word "caste?" Graestan ( Talk ) 04:49, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ****Actually, the caste name is supoosed to be capitalized. Is there a specific article that doesn't do this that you based this objection off of?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:20, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) *****Ngaaluh, Vua Rapuung, Czulkang Lah, Shedao Shai, Mezhan Kwaad, to name five articles that have been approved as FAs. By my book, that's enough to call it a strong precedent. Giving it a quick look, The New Essential Chronology has none of the caste names aside from Shamed Ones capitalized. Graestan ( Talk ) 12:06, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) ******Graestan, I aplogize. I didn't look at all those articles. I just looked at two instances where it was capitalized and assumed the caste was capitalized (and planned on checking the books later to be sure). This is now fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:00, 24 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * You might mention his depiction only in the Miniatures line in the BtS.
 * 32) **Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:40, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * The quotes in the body are pretty vague and unexpressive. Can something a bit more definitive be found, or better attribution lines produced?
 * 34) **I changed some and added one. Carr isn't exactly Jolee Bindo, but if those still aren't up to par, let me know.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:40, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * The section "Infiltration" should probably be broken up, another one being created for the springing of the trap.
 * 36) **Fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:40, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) * Graestan ( Talk ) 20:56, 22 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) **Thanks Graestan.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:40, 23 October 2008 (UTC)

Comments


 * Thanks for reviewing it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:45, 12 October 2008 (UTC)