Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Ranulf Trommer


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Ranulf Trommer

 * Nominated by: Havac 06:26, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: River of Chaos&hellip;likes to use exclamation points! So expect to see them&hellip;in the quotes! A lot!&hellip;and ellipses! Havac 06:26, 12 July 2009 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Well done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 12:27, 16 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:37, 25 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Just waiting for Wing Commander Trommer to crop up in the New Republic era&hellip;a fool's dream --  —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 12:24, 25 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) I'm with Harrar on this one. --Eyrezer 00:52, 28 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:02, 28 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 2) * Before I read through it, there are a lot of redlinked articles that need to be created. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 14:34, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **There always are; I didn't feel like creating them last night. I'll get them today. Havac 16:36, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * "After he recovered, approximately six months after the destruction of the Death Star, With his father, Ranulf Trommer and his father, Admiral Trommer, met Grand Moff Lynch Hauser, his father's patron." - I have no idea.
 * 5) **See if you have an idea now. Havac 01:38, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * You should probably mention under "Making the choice" how Admiral Trommer purposely bumped into Hauser, causing a blaster bolt meant for Ranulf to miss him.
 * 7) **Added. Havac 01:38, 15 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * Additionally, he has an entry in The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 15:12, 13 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Entry reviewed and added. Havac 01:46, 16 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) One thing for you: the last paragraph of "among the rebels" is too pbp. Mainly, there's too much "they did this, they did that" in the first few sentences. Otherwise, nice work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  18:26, 19 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) *I've trimmed it down some and played around with it a little. Havac 18:31, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) "the location of secret mines on M'haeli mining valuable dragite". Can you reword the mines mining? The only other thing is that this pic really is pretty bad. --Eyrezer 11:22, 27 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) *The mines are no longer mining. The image is from a relatively small panel, so that's the best I can do until Red or someone gives it a spiffier upload. Havac 16:28, 27 August 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I believe you're misinterpreting the Omnibus date (6 months ABY) here. You seem to have applied it to the bulk of the story that happens after Trommer's recovery from the Battle of Aguarl III. However, in Empire 22: Alone Together, also set six months ABY, Leia is still negotiating over a Rebel base on Aguarl III with the planet's Prime Minister. This means River of Chaos actually begins six months after the battle of Yavin, only a few days or weeks after Alone Together. --Borsk Fey'lya  Talk 16:55, 5 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Huh. I'll make the changes. Havac 01:26, 6 August 2009 (UTC)