Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Garven Dreis


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Garven Dreis

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 07:23, 20 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Just hold them off for a few...weeks.

(6 Inqs/1 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) It's away! -- Ozzel 23:38, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:01, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:49, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) CCG goodness! Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:29, 25 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Good show. My host would applaud your abilities. —Tommy9281  [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 16:29, 25 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:32, 28 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:16, 31 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * Some inconsistency between "torpedos" and "torpedoes". I checked in IRC, but consensus for American English seems to be "torpedoes". I could be wrong.
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) * Uh, Empire at War info? Rule 11.
 * 5) **No, he just appears with Red Squadron in either the context of Yavin, or in instant action modes, etc. Thefourdotelipsis 23:50, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Also, no Marvel references? Rule 11.
 * 7) **It's an adaptation. He just does the same stuff as in the film. The part he doesn't do is in the film is in the novel, as per the BTS.
 * 8) * No Empire references? Rule 11.
 * 9) **It doesn't present anything new. So, no.
 * 10) Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 13:52, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) *You too. Thefourdotelipsis 23:50, 2 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) Toprawa:
 * 13) * I'd like to see the Battle of Virujansi pipelinked in there someplace. Your choice where.
 * 14) **Done.
 * 15) * I'm not sure if this correct. I'm pretty sure that deleted scene where Dreis meets with Luke comes after the Dodonna briefing, not the other way around: "Shortly afterwards, Dreis accompanied his men at Dodonna's briefing."
 * 16) **Yes, they meet twice: Once in the RD/Journal, then later, again, after the briefing.
 * 17) ***I gotcha. I had forgotten that the bit about how he tells Luke he knew his father was edited out of the SE, which is what I was after. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:47, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * You could definitely throw two quotes at the top of the Battle of Yavin sections
 * 19) **They're in there.
 * 20) * Similar to the Krail objection, I'd like to see a little bit around the beginning of the Battle of Yavin section explaining that Dreis and Red Squadron would be there to defend Gold Squadron's Y-wings, the intended attackers
 * 21) **Ok, got that in there now.
 * 22) * I know we can pipelink an article into "another Imperial." One of those CCG DS- pilots.
 * 23) **It's either DS-61-2 or DS-61-3. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:12, 19 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Thing is, I don't think the editing makes it clear which one it is. Not sure how to resolve that issue.
 * 25) ****Yeah, I went in and looked it at myself. Rather unclear. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:47, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) * I'm sure he's in Star Wars: The National Public Radio Dramatization, possibly with new info, and prob the Visual Dictionary, if he's in the CVD. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:28, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) **I'll look into it. Thefourdotelipsis 03:05, 20 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ***Apparently I conferred with Muuurgh on the matter much earlier, but forgot to add it to the source list. No new info lies within. Thefourdotelipsis 00:30, 25 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * I hate to snipe on Chack's objection below, but I really don't feel all that was added is necessary. This could more succinctly be cut down to just say something like "Following the Declaration of Rebellion, in which the Alliance to Restore the Republic officially declared its intentions to resist the Galactic Empire's control of the galaxy...etc.": "Following the conclusion of the Clone Wars, the Republic was transformed into the Galactic Empire by Palpatine, who declared himself Emperor. Despite the fact that Palpatine effectively controlled the galaxy, there were numerous dissident groups who planned to rebel against Imperial rule.[3] At some stage after the Declaration of Rebellion..."
 * 30) **That's just me being circuitous. :P Your wording works, so I'm using it (if you don't mind).
 * 31) ***Heh, sure. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:29, 25 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * Also, after reading through this again, I'm not sure where this is coming from: "Dreis initially thought that his attack had succeeded." Someone in the movie does yell, "It's a hit," immediately after the shots are fired, but it's not Dreis. The movie captions credit the line to "Man," to whom Dreis responds, "Negative, negative...etc." This should either be reworded or cut out. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:47, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) **Tinkered, though if you think it needs more, just say the word. Thefourdotelipsis 00:30, 25 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) Chack has one thing (and normally doesn't refer to himself in third person):
 * 35) * Give a little context about the rise of the Empire before the Declaration of Rebellion. I know it's obvious to most people, but something of the sort I mentioned would do it good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:38, 19 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) **Got that in there now. Thefourdotelipsis 03:05, 20 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) ***Well, now it's culled back considerably from what I had, but I think it still gets the job done. Lemme know if you disagree. Thefourdotelipsis 00:51, 27 July 2008 (UTC)

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