Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Barpotomous Drebble (second nomination)

Barpotomous Drebble

 * Nominated by: Cull Tremayne 06:01, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Trying to restore this article to FA, as it was only minor issues that got it de-FAd, as I understand it. Cull Tremayne 06:01, May 1, 2010 (UTC)

Menkooroo
Can you find a source for Billy Dee having advertised Colt 45? A youtube video'd probably do it. Also, maybe add "the actor who played Lando in Empire and Jedi" after you mention Billy Dee? Menkooroo 02:50, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Good point, added. Cull Tremayne 04:19, May 3, 2010 (UTC)

Takes me back to the good old days...

 * A marginal explanation of what a skifter is and its significance might be in order.
 * "Seemed to escalate" and otherlikewise statements could probably be tweaked and made a bit more solid, if it's just going off your interpretations.
 * "Immediately after this promotion, Lemo and Sanda's gang accosted Captain Drebble about the whereabouts of an expensive artifact, the Dancing Goddess." - Is "accosted" the right word there?
 * "Barpotomous Drebble was a large man who enjoyed the finer things." - Bit too informal.
 * "Although he possessed a sense of style, Drebble was not a very apt fighter in hand to hand combat, and he was genuinely shocked and dismayed when one of his subordinates lashed out at him, punching him in the face." - What does one have to do with the other?
 * More "seemed" stuff. Cull, Cull. :P
 * Tis all. Thefourdotelipsis 04:07, May 27, 2010 (UTC)