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Removal of GA status

 * Reduxed at Meeting 56.  IFYLOFD  ( Enter the Floydome ) 01:34, August 19, 2013 (UTC)
 * Removed on August 19, 2013.  IFYLOFD  ( Enter the Floydome ) 01:34, August 19, 2013 (UTC)

Redux review

 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a reduxed good article. The result of the discussion was Good article status lost. Please do not modify the page.

Ringo

 * Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 56.
 * Date added: March 24, 2013

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Support
 * 1)  JangFett  (Talk) 13:41, July 1, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Winterz

 * Again, the Bts section can be expanded and it should.
 * Done.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 00:01, March 26, 2013 (UTC)
 * Though a lot less, you should probably fix the misspelling and such. Winterz (talk) 16:32, March 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * Tried to fix as much as I could and sent a request for a second look.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 00:01, March 26, 2013 (UTC)

Bangeth

 * "Part of the 501st Legion, Ringo participated in the defense of Ereesus and the Republic invasion of the planet Umbara around 21 BBY. Immediately after landing, the clone troopers came under heavy fire from the native Umbarans." If you're going to mention the "defense of Ereesus," then I would also give context to it instead of focusing primarily on the Battle of Umbara.
 * Done.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Is the Ereesus battle a battle or defense (with a confirmed name)? Unless it's stated in the source, I would use a conjectural statement for the intro, instead of saying "defense of Ereesus."
 * No confirmed name, changed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Since he is part of the Torrent Company now, please see what you could do to mention this in the intro.
 * Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * See objection at the bottom.  JangFett  (Talk) 22:33, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * "...Ringo was part of the Torrent Company in the 501st Legion," Something does not seem to flow right. Perhaps if you tweak the wording a bit, it will be better. I.e, "he was a member of Torrent Company, a unit within" or something along those lines. Try something out.
 * How's this?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Before mentioning this setback, try to find a way to mention "Assisted by the Ereesus Planetary Security Forces" before.  JangFett  (Talk) 20:43, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Adressed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 21:55, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * "Ringo and Torrent Company were dispatched to assist the Ereesus Planetary Security Forces to defend the planet Ereesus against a Separatist invasion. " This sentence needs some tweaking. "to assist the_____to defend the___" Try to make it flow better.  JangFett  (Talk) 22:33, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Better?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:11, March 28, 2013 (UTC)
 * The intro is rather confusing due to you saying Ringo either served in Torrent Company and later the 501st itself. I would clean this up in the intro and make a separate sentence about Torrent Company/501st. Later, when you mention Umbara, say Ringo and the 501st Legion instead of "Ringo served with the 501st." I hope this makes sense.  JangFett  (Talk) 22:35, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Check it out.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 15:11, March 28, 2013 (UTC)
 * It's still the same. Look at "Ringo and his unit were sent to" and then later you said "Ringer and the 501st."  JangFett  (Talk) 15:49, March 31, 2013 (UTC)
 * I hope it is better now. Forvige me, if I understand you wrong.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:48, March 31, 2013 (UTC)

Toprawa

 * The Equipment section should detail any and all weaponry Ringo uses in his appearances, particularly the TCW episode. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:12, July 19, 2013 (UTC)

Comments
 * Copy-edited at Lee's request. &mdash;MJ&mdash; Council Chambers 20:09, March 27, 2013 (UTC)