Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Hangar 8122


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Hangar 8122

 * Nominated by:  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 08:01, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: TCW Webcomics location

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good job, Gethralkin!-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  19:57, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 18:51, June 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) * See below.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 18:27, June 17, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 02:23, June 22, 2011 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Exiled Jedi
 * 2) * You mention the facility as a station once, but you do not link to space station. If it is a space station, please link it. Otherwise change it to facility, which is the term you used before.
 * 3) **Fixed.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 17:16, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) * Context on Bormus. Is it a planet? Where is it located?
 * 5) **Done.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 17:16, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 6) *I also took care of a few linking problems. (Jedi, The Clone Wars, The Clone Wars: Procedure) Try to link everything the next time.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  11:53, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) **Oops, you did link The Clone Wars, sorry.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  11:54, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 8) Axinal
 * 9) * I have trouble with the phrase "Gran planet". Compare it with the phrase "Human planet," which to me makes it sound like the planet itself is Human. Could you perhaps say "Gran-affiliated planet" or something of the like? Otherwise, very nice.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 23:37, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 10) **No Gran is big enough to be a planet!!! Fixed. ;)  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 00:03, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * 11) ***You've obviously never heard of Jabba the Gran. :P&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 00:20, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * 12) * Also, would a quote be possible, even if it doesn't mention 8122 directly? I think even the line spoken by the guard, "I can't have you come in here, troops," would be fine.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 23:57, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * 13) **Quote added. Also, I split the article to include an intro and it still comes under 250 words.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 07:00, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * 14) ***No problem. In that case, you're obviously free to remove the intro if you wish. If you do intend to keep the article sectioned, however, it might be good to find another quote for the History section.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 10:19, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * 15) ****Intro removed. Please check.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 01:53, June 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 16) * Some context on R2-D2 should be added, and I think that's all I have. Good work!&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 10:17, June 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 17) **Done.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 18:13, June 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * 18) * After some rewriting, the article only mentions Shadow Squadron once, and there is no context for it at all. They should be mentioned earlier in the article as approaching the hangar along with Skywalker and the others.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 18:27, June 17, 2011 (UTC)
 * 19) ** Skywalker and the others never approached the hangar. They sent the clones to get the Y-wings while they stayed back with the gran official.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 15:49, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 20) ***Oh, wait. I see what you mean. The way it ended up, Shadow Squadron appeared to be there already instead of arriving with Skywalker. I have fixed it to be less ambiguous.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 15:56, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 21) ****Yeah, basically, I just wanted Shadow Squadron introduced earlier in the passage so readers would understand when they were admitted. Looks good now.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 16:10, June 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 22) Imperators II
 * 23) * As with L-2832, the "History" section needs to be outlined in the intro.  Imperators II (Talk) 14:49, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * 24) **The History section was a test to see if making an intro would bring it over 250 words or not. Since it was reasonably under, the article has been recombined&mdash;with your edits left in, though. Thanks for catching those.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 01:53, June 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 25) * Is is necessary to put commas before and after "and R2-D2"?
 * 26) **Fixed, but part of another fix.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 18:13, June 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * 27) * Currently ref[2.2] is followed by ref[2.3], which doesn't make sense.  Imperators II (Talk) 08:39, June 14, 2011 (UTC)
 * 28) **Oops, didn't catch that. Thanks. Fixed.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 18:13, June 15, 2011 (UTC)
 * 29) Jujiggum
 * 30) * Per our images policy, the text bubble in the main image should be filled in. Text bubbles should only be blanked if they are cut off by the image's edge.
 * 31) **The image I had with the bubble filled with text was replaced by JMAS with one that had the bubble blanked. I suppose you could find out why he replaced the image.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 06:31, June 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 32) ***JMAS used this reasoning concerning speech bubbles. However, the image in question in his discussion actually follows the rules being that the bubble is partial. I have replaced the 8122 image with one that adheres to the image rules in lieu of a reasonable argument against showing bubble text. I also think that the text (per his argument) actually fits the subject of the article, so there really is no reason to blank it. To sum up: problem fixed.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 17:38, June 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 33) * Also, why don't you mention specifically that the bombers were stored in the hangar?
 * 34) **Thought I did, but looking at it again, it is only implied in what I wrote. Fixed.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 06:31, June 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 35) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Talk ) 18:04, June 17, 2011 (UTC)
 * 36) **It's been a few days. Are you satisfied with the changes?  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 22:56, June 21, 2011 (UTC)
 * 37) ***Looks good. Sorry for not getting back to you sooner; RL has had me swamped lately. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 02:23, June 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 38) ****No prob. I fixed the "currently" because it literally means "At the present time" conveying present tense instead of past tense. Other than that, the changes you made look good. More succinctly put than I had. Thanks.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 03:36, June 22, 2011 (UTC)

Comments
 * The article is currently 190 words, so while it's technically below the 200-word threshold for the necessary attempt at an intro, it might be worthwhile to try sectioning the article a bit to see if it can reach GA potential. This is not an objection or a demand, just a thought.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 23:37, June 12, 2011 (UTC)
 * I will see what I can do. It might be possible, but I can see it easily being a restatement of intro to body, as there is not really a whole lot on the hangar itself. The quote you mention above would probably work. Most of the text was originally in the Bts, though, so it might work either way.  Gethralkin  Hyperwave 00:13, June 13, 2011 (UTC)
 * I'm fine with it as a CAN, so no worries if it doesn't work out. It won't affect my vote.&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 00:21, June 13, 2011 (UTC)