Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Krudar


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Krudar

 * Nominated by: Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 11:33, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: And the DarkStryder bandwagon keeps on rolling! 1,415 words.

(6 Inqs/1 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good job, Cav.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 04:16, 9 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:46, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:44, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  17:52, 29 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Graestan ( Talk ) 22:17, 4 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Why don't you watch where you're going.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:23, 6 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 14:05, 8 August 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * I feel like some more could be added to the P/T. In a way, the bio itself serves a very detailed P/T section. A lot of that could be glossed over again, particularly the biochemical agent that caused him to become surly, how he would fight with his friend, etc.
 * 3) **Expanded.
 * 4) * It may also be pertinent to mention that the FarStar is destroyed at the Battle of Kathol, which would leave open but not assert the possibility that he died, which would then supplement the BTS bit detailing this possibility. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:21, 12 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) **Added. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 13:21, 14 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Grass clippings:
 * 7) * "Serving on the FarStar throughout its mission into the Kathol sector, Krudar's surly and temperamental attitude did little to endear him to the rest of the crew." – Please reword, minding verb-subject agreement.
 * 8) **Reworded, minor expansion.
 * 9) * Not so keen on this sentence: "Although Krudar appeared to be a typical Duros, he was actually the opposite." It seems POV, speculative in nature.
 * 10) **Rewritten. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 14:47, 28 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Graestan ( Talk ) 17:05, 18 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) From the Worldship of Chack Jadson:
 * 13) * How did he become exposed to the chemical?
 * 14) **Added.
 * 15) * "The feeling would only diminish when the gunner returned to his quarters." This seems a bit contradictory. Do you mean intensify instead of diminish, or are you simply saying it would not go away completely?
 * 16) **It's one of the strange effects of the Rift - it aggravated his agoraphobia through hallucination and mental stimuli. The feelings would lessen when he returned to his quarters, but his underlying fear was always there. The Rift effects just made it more noticeable.
 * 17) * How did Boom annoy him? you touch on this in P&T, but a little in the article would be nice.
 * 18) **Added.
 * 19) * I'd like a short bit to supplement the part about how he was unique for his species. Maybe like "Although Krudar appeared to be a typical Duros", then a few traits that most Duros have that he lacks.
 * 20) **Section slightly rewritten. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 14:47, 28 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *Impressive article. I enjoyed reading this.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:55, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 23) * One minor thing: I would clarify the agoraphobia in the P&T, because at some points, it does become more prevalent according to the bio.
 * 24) **Ah - the agoraphobia is only intensified by the effects of the Rift, not as a result of anything else. I've changed the text in the bio to better clarify this. Hopefully, it reads better now.
 * 25) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:35, 6 August 2008 (UTC)

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