Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Darth Nihl


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Darth Nihl

 * Nominated by: DC 02:49, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The first in line for a project of mine that will see all major characters from Legacy be FA'd. This is just the beginning, beware.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1) After a copyedit.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:48, 6 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) –Victor  Redstarbird.svg ( talk page ) 05:49, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 22:07, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 07:06, 13 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:20, 25 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  —Xwing328 (Talk) 04:31, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I believe that in his succession boxes, you should mention what he is a Fist and Hand of; for example, "Fist of One Sith" would be one. –Victor  Redstarbird.svg ( talk page ) 05:43, 5 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I agree. Addressed, and thanks for the review, Victor. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) 01:36, 8 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Sure Tommy, no problem. Another thing I noticed is in the "Behind the scenes" there is nothing else about him except for his appearances. Is there nothing on his background or origins or anything by the authors of Legacy? (With sources of course) Also, I believed I spotted "Legacy" without italics and "hand" without capitalization, which should be capitalized since it is a proper noun. Now the following isn't really an objection as I'm not sure where I stand with the requirements on this, but shouldn't you simply tell us of which arcs Nihl appears in, without having to describe the plot? Since that is already summarized/told (and referenced) in the biography, I find it sort of redundant. But that's just a suggestion as far as I know. –Victor  Redstarbird.svg ( talk page ) 04:33, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *Hey, Vic. I took care of of the "Legacy" and "Hand" issues. I also provided some minimal insight into the character's name origin, though at this time I am unaware of any other sources that delve into the character's origins regarding the writers. As far as the redundancy, I feel that the opening statement of Nihl's BtS gives reason for the little explanations found after each appearance. I understand your point about it being repetetive, but I understand what DC was trying to do and feel it is still a beneficial part of the article. If, however, consensus is later decided against that stance, I have no problems with reworking the content so as not to repeat itself. Thanks again for your review, Squish. —Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) 20:52, 13 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **That's understandable. Those are all the issues I found with this nomination. Nice job, to you and DC (even if he is gone). –Victor  Redstarbird.svg ( talk page ) 05:49, 14 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) "Instead, a search was warranted for Skywalker, in whom Krayt had an interest because of his potential to use the Force." - I think it's a bit more than that. Needs elaboration. Thefourdotelipsis 02:20, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *Addressed. thanks, Fourdot. —Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) 13:14, 19 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) Grunny:
 * 9) * In the second paragraph of the intro "Nihl" seems overused, can you change a couple to pronouns?
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) * Same as the previous objection for the second paragraph of the Vendaxa subsection.
 * 12) **Addressed.
 * 13) * You only mention clearly that Nihl was originally Krayt's Fist in the intro, this should be mentioned at the start of the bio too.
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * "While they fought, Skywalker's mother, Morrigan Corde, blew up..." Can you give a brief mention of the plan to rescue Skywalker, just to explain Corde's sudden appearance.
 * 16) **Addressed. Did some reworking and removal of a decent amount of stuff, because it (and much of the article) reads like it could be from anyone's bio. I tried to work it as being told from Nihl's POV as much as possible. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 22:20, 12 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) * "By the time Darth Wyyrlok returned to Coruscant following the Battle on Had Abbadon and the death of Darth Krayt, Nihl had recovered and bore a new arm." Could you explain the events a bit better? I know you didn't add this line, but a little more explanation of the events surrounding Krayt's death would be helpful in setting up Nihl's appearance in Legacy 35 :-).
 * 18) **Addressed. Check that out, see if it's satisfactory please.
 * 19) * Grunny  ( Talk ) 13:46, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ** Will complete the others when I get to a pc. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 02:39, 12 May 2009 (UTC) All set. Thanks for the review, Grunny. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 04:57, 13 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) From Fiolli:
 * 22) *The succession boxes should have years in them for the other individuals since they are available. Otherwise, it is pretty good shape. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 01:49, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) **Is this what you meant? —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 21:21, 20 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Yes. It gave me enough to work with. Nice job. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:20, 25 May 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I volunteer to take over this nom, in light of DC's departure. —Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) 06:22, 27 February 2009 (UTC)
 * The illustration of Ossus in a section that describes events seven years later is quite jarring. I suggest that it either be removed or moved up to the relevant section. Thefourdotelipsis 02:20, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Removed per your suggestion. —Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) 19:50, 19 April 2009 (UTC)