Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Aurora Adasca


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Aurora Adasca

 * Nominated by: N  AYAYEN  20:24, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I expected more of her. Meh.

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 22:04, April 21, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) GTQ 01:04, April 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) ~  Savage  BOB sig.png 06:27, April 28, 2011 (UTC)
 * 4) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:49, May 4, 2011 (UTC)

Object
 * I suggest rewording the first paragraph so that you explicitly call her a Jedi Scout in the first line (which should serve as a "definition" of the character). Currently, the article seems to be privileging her niece-hood to the Adasca clan rather than her Jedi-hood, much as if we began Luke Skywalker's article with, "Luke Skywalker was the son of Anakin Skywalker. He eventually became a Jedi Knight." Please let me know if this is not as clear as I was hoping to make it! ~ Savage  BOB sig.png 22:00, April 25, 2011 (UTC)
 * I've tried to reword it to have her as a Jedi first but I'm wary of ending up reversing what little chronology there is. Thanks for the pointer. N  AYAYEN  08:37, April 26, 2011 (UTC)
 * No, good show. ~ Savage  BOB sig.png 06:27, April 28, 2011 (UTC)
 * Rubedo
 * "Arkoh Adasca never contacted her after she was taken and nor did Lucien Draay, a family friend of the Adascas and a Jedi Master, see her again either." This is a double "and." NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:33, May 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed. N  AYAYEN  10:29, May 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * Can you include the complete CSWE citation, please?
 * As far as I'm aware, such citations aren't put with the entry in Sources list. The full citation is used for the CSWE references though. N  AYAYEN  10:29, May 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * You use the full cite, minus the page number, for the Source list. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:49, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * "Spiriting away" is not a direct quote, so you cannot use it like that. Rephrase. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:33, May 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * Reworded with a different synonym for "spirit away". N  AYAYEN  10:29, May 1, 2011 (UTC)
 * Imperators II
 * Has any source ever used "tribes" in the context of Mandalorians? I know "clans" have been mentioned, but are they really interchangeable words?
 * I made that change to the article. "Clans" would actually be better. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 17:49, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * I've reworded it anyway. Naru went overboard on the context. N  AYAYEN  18:38, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * The authors of the comic should be noted in the Bts section.  Imperators II (Talk) 16:02, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * Noted. N  AYAYEN  18:38, May 4, 2011 (UTC)

Comments
 * Exiledjedi
 * I don't want this to be an objection, but it seems to me that if this article had an introduction added it might be over 250 words and therefore eligible for good article status instead of comprehensive. However, this is just a suggestion not an objection.--Exiledjedi 18:53, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * Actually, the article is already over 200 words, so per CAN rule #14, the addition of an intro needs to at least be attempted. Have you tried sectioning it, Nayayen?&mdash; Axinal  Convocation Chamber 19:07, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * Heh, edit conflicted. Thanks for pointing it out and, yes I have now added an intro and it has pushed the word count to 252. As such, if an EC could remove this nom then I can put it up the GAN. N  AYAYEN  19:23, May 4, 2011 (UTC)
 * Moved to the GAN now. N  AYAYEN  19:38, May 4, 2011 (UTC)