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Derek Klivian

 * Nomination by: - Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My other summer nom. Image replacement by Red is ongoing. Havac 16:32, 12 September 2008 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/1 users/5 total)
Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 00:22, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Hugetastic. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 01:24, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:33, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Witty message here. Cull Tremayne 15:30, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) User:Camodroid11 16:42, 2nd january 2008 9(utc)

Object Comments
 * The SOTE section doesn't seem to mention Klivian specifically at all. Does something specifically say he was present there? There seems to be a few areas where you mention the Rogues as a group and not Klivian as an individual, and the same question applies. If he's not, then I think it might be just a bit too much of a stretch, especially when you're committing that level of detail. "Organa" is rather abruptly re-introduced in the Mission to Mrlsst section - this should probably be tweaked. And I'm counting 5 redlinks. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Redlinks reduced within acceptable limits. Leia reintroduced. The Rogues thing is a general "We know he was in the squadron at this time, we know the full squadron was here, ergo he was here, though we'll keep it fairly generic." Havac 04:51, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Right. I get what you're saying, but since nothing is explicitly stating that he was there, I think that at least the SOTE section could but cut down. Thefourdotelipsis 23:43, 1 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Stuff
 * 2) * "Klivian's fears proved unfounded as Antilles and Calrissian made their way through the Death Star to its main reactor and destroyed it, killing Darth Vader and Galactic Emperor Palpatine." If you're going to source this to RotJ, then I'm not sure that I can agree with this sentence. The film doesn't really show either of them dying as the result of the Death Star's destruction.
 * 3) * Under Victory at Endor: "By that time, Klivian had built a reputation for frequent crashes, and his friends joked about his supposed affection for bacta treatments." Can you choose a different lead-in? Only because you mentioned his reputation earlier under Rogue: "He quickly developed a joking reputation for enjoying bacta due to his numerous crashes and injuries". Obviously both statements are sourced to different books/times, but in the article he already had that reputation, and him building it up even further is kinda confusing, especially with no further crashes really specified.
 * 4) **I agree that they are in two different contexts, but I'd still recommend a reword of the second mention, since "By that time" implies that he didn't have that reputation before, which obviously isn't true in the context of the article. Cull Tremayne 01:17, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * Under Mission to Mrlsst: "Antilles prepared a strike on the Imperial base while Loro led a commando mission to rescue Leia Organa, whose presence on-world and capture one of Loro's fighters, Vance Rego, had reported." What does the last part of this sentence mean? Rego captured "Organa" or something? Obviously confused by Rego's double-cross, but still no idea what's going on in this sentence.
 * 6) *I'm about halfway through, just hampered by other stuff. Cull Tremayne 16:14, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * Under Kidnapping on Corellia, last section: "Their ship was underarmed for dealing with the attackers, but Horn intervened in his X-wing, shooting down the attackers." Can we get a synonym for one of those "the attackers"?
 * 8) * Under Extracting the Emperor: "Klivian had been enjoying some downtime, attempting to pick up women at the base pool with Janson, but Pestage had fled the manipulations of Director of Imperial Intelligence Ysanne Isard on Coruscant and been imprisoned" Can this be reworded somewhat? I realize that the sentence is trying to tell us how Klivian's romantic pursuits were interrupted by the Pestage mission, but as is, it sort of reads that Pestage's conflict with Isard is somehow related to Hobbie's poolside activities.
 * 9) * Per your response to objections on the 181st FAN, would you object to creating a redlink for the false 181st? In the same vein, a link to the false Harran might be appropriate as well, even though the current article combined both characters.
 * 10) *No prostitute link or a pic of Klivian with a Bothan escort? I am shocked, sir, shocked. Cull Tremayne 05:11, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Just a suggestion: Couldn't you get some better images for the Darklighter section? At the moment, it's just various headshots of him, or him lying in bed...I think that panels of him actually doing something would illustrate the article much better. Thefourdotelipsis 02:11, 30 November 2008 (UTC)
 * What's the deal with the Klivian surviving Hoth? I thought that the only source that addressed it was the NEGtC, but in that section you've sourced it to "Who's Who". Is that right? I only ask because Kesin Ommis doesn't source that pilot's survival to "Who's Who", instead it sort of infers that Ommis survives based on Klivian's survival in the NEGtC. What exactly does "Who's Who" say about Klivian in the BoH? Cull Tremayne 16:14, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Jamming in more NEGTC citations is all I really wanted to see. :P Cull Tremayne 01:17, 30 December 2008 (UTC)

Raid on the Iziz Royal Palace

 * Nominated by: -- Tommy9281 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Damsel in distress.

(4 Inqs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) So that's where you've been lately...  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:47, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Greyman ( Talk ) 15:03, 15 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Thefourdotelipsis 23:42, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:48, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 03:22, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the physics homework Chack Jadson is not doing right now:
 * 2) * Bit too much PBP in intro
 * 3) **Really? I left out maaad details in the intro. Care to assist? —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:48, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Just "As Ulic Qel-Droma stepped forward to offer the protection of both the Galactic Republic and the Jedi Order to the Queen". I feel that this could be rephrased a tad. I dislike the "stepped forward" bit.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:31, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * "For 400 years" Is this an exact date? if so, link.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * Your " seem to be off in the quotes (no spaces are necessary).
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) * "Sounds of blaster fire could be heard in the background as Novar answered the comlink from the defense towers." A bit too flowery.
 * 11) **Addressed.
 * 12) * "Ulic Qel-Droma arrived at that same moment with proud stories of how the Riders he had engaged in battle met their demise, but was quickly silenced by the sight a distressed Amanoa." I don't think this is necessary.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * "laughing ominously at the young, novice Jedi, awaiting their return." Same thing; I'd say this is unneeded.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) * "Veitch also used as the first official mission of his new characters Ulic and Cay Qel-Droma, and Tott Doneeta". Is a word missing?
 * 17) **Addressed.
 * 18) *Very nice Tommy. You've come a long way. I'm impressed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:08, 16 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Iziz Royal Palace.JPG and Image:PoorAmanoa.JPG are very low quality. Re-scan 'em. --Imperialles 10:20, 14 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Addressed the first one, working on the second one. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 12:45, 16 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **The second one has also been addressed. Many thanks to JMAS, for the clean images. If still unsatisfactory, Imp, please advise, and I'll rectify. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 01:11, 17 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * The part where Jeth tells his apprentices of Onderon's history should be presented earlier in the piece, and not as something that Jeth speaks of, to remove that point of view aspect. Actually, that problem runs throughout the article, as you're telling this from the perspective of the Jedi. A more objective view would be desirable, where you wouldn't have to reveal what and who people are - just say who and what they are as soon as they appear. You should also talk about why Kira and Gobee are performing the raid, etc. Thefourdotelipsis 02:43, 16 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ** Still working on this, Fourdot. Should be good now, Fourdot. Please advise if more is required. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:46, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***The problem still exists, since you "reveal" Kira and Gobee. "The Commandos, who were actually Beast-Lord Oron Kira and his second-in-command Gobee, easily dispatched the Protectors, and stormed the room where the Queen and her daughter were sequestered." - This should not be, and the characters should be introduced in the prelude section. Thefourdotelipsis 22:10, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ****Should be good now, Fourdot. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 08:49, 2 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) From the underwater moffship of AdmirableAckbar:
 * 8) * Conjectural title? Additionally, and this isn't really a steadfast objection, but it looks odd having the article title at "Raid on the Iziz Royal Palace" and the bolded bit reading "Royal Palace of Iziz." I'd suggest swapping the "Royal Palace of Iziz" with the "Iziz Royal Palace" later on in the sentence for consistency.
 * 9) **Conjecture tag added, sentence swapped around. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:18, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * In the intro, it should state that the Jedi were trailed, then fired upon by the Beast Riders in chronological order. Additionally, the "arrival" should be clarified to state where they arrived to, since the last thing mentioned was the peace negotiations, but they hadn't actually arrived there yet.
 * 11) **addressed.
 * 12) * The intro needs a bit of reworking. The article's about the raid on the palace, not the Jedi's role in everything; if anything, the POV should be leaning towards the Beast Riders. As is, it reads like a summary, and only really four lines of it describe the actual raid itself. Also, "the Queen demanded that Ulic Qel-Droma and his companions have the Princess returned to her&mdash;at once" seems a little dramatic.
 * 13) **Addressed, I believe.
 * 14) ***I'm not seeing too much difference. There's still essentially only four or five lines discussing the raid itself, with the rest detailing the background, and it still reads like a summary of the comic. Aside from the "preconceived plot" mention in the first sentence, the aim/point of the raid (kidnapping the princess) isn't stated until it happens. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:40, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) ****It should be good now. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:09, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) * The "background" section should really start with a date rather than the "for four hundred years." "Between [approximately] whenever and whenever" would probably be better.
 * 17) **Fixed. Greyman ( Talk ) 18:18, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * "As a test of their Jedi knighthood" reads a little awkwardly.
 * 19) **Addressed.
 * 20) * Per 4dot above on Jeth's brief. To be honest I don't think it's particularly relevant at all and would prefer to see it go completely, but if it has to stay it should be presented in chronological order.
 * 21) **Addressed.
 * 22) * "When the Nebulon Ranger entered the skies of Onderon, it was immediately set upon by what seemed to be a flock of giant birds flying in their path. After closer scrutiny, Tott Doneeta realized that what was thought to be birds were actually Beast Riders, determined on preventing the Jedi from reaching Iziz." Again, this is written completely from the POV of the Jedi and reads like a plot summary, which it shouldn't.
 * 23) **Addressed.
 * 24) * The Prelude section just reads like a summary of what's gone before the raid; while this is somewhat necessary and not a bad thing, there's no actual prelude for the raid itself. E.g. no planning, conception, nothing on the part of the Beast Riders.
 * 25) ** Good point. Actually, this could be reworked to talk about the conception, planning, etc. from the perspective of the Beast Riders, and I'd very much like to do it that way. I'd like to catch up with you in IRC sometime to discuss this further. Please advise when you'll be around, and I'll make my best attempt to meet you. Thanks. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 17:24, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) ***It should be good now.
 * 27) * Same problems re:POV with the "attack on the palace" subsection, and most of the first paragraph should be in the prelude section. And with "Galia's abduction" and per 4dot on the introduction of Kira and Gobee and the mention of the raid's purpose.
 * 28) **Addressed.
 * 29) ***The "attack on the palace" subsection still suffers from the same problem, though it is marginally better now. But the "Her assumptions were cut short when a comlink transmission chimed in from the perimeter defenses, stating that the Beast Riders had overtaken the northern wall, and were en route to swarm the palace" stuff, again, is entirely from the POV of the Jedi/Amanoa, and some of the earlier stuff should be reworked. The stuff about the Beast Riders sneaking info out of Iziz - or the speculation - should be stated earlier on, and "the Queen remarked at her disappointment that lowly Jedi youths were sent to her aid, instead of an seasoned Jedi Master" should just say that Amanoa wasn't happy about it, rather than she said she wasn't happy about it. That's just one example of many in that paragraph. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:40, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) ****Most of that stuff I deemed unnecessary, and reworked it as it should be, I believe. Let me know if that's still no good.
 * 31) * The stuff about Veitch using the event for whatever purpose should come before the audio drama, unless its referring to that. If it is it's at least partially inaccurate since John Whitman wrote the actual scripts. Also, why does the ref note in the BtS link to Star Wars: Tales of the Jedi ?
 * 32) ** Because I couldn't figure out how to create a reference to the interview conducted by Greyman. I'd like some assistance int this area, if you don't mind. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:09, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) ***Looks like you got it sorted out. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:48, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **Addressed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:26, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) ** Aside from a number of spelling errors and the like, this is a good article&mdash; however, it has a long way to go before it's more than simply a summary of the comic. Also, while normally I don't have a problem with it, passive voice is really overused in it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:04, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) Toprawa:
 * 37) * Source list needs to be ordered correctly. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:49, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, Toprawa. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 06:39, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) Tales of the Pasta Bowl:
 * 40) *"Because the couple knew that the Queen would not allow accept their union&hellip;" Which is it: Allow, accept, or both?
 * 41) **Addressed.
 * 42) *"The mounted warriors trailed the Jedi and attacked their starship, paying out blaster fire before the Knights could even land." Trailing implies that they are being stalked or followed closely. This does not jive for me with "before the Knights could even land" which implies that the Jedi had not even set foot on Onderon yet. Please reword this.
 * 43) **Addressed.
 * 44) *Second paragraph of the introduction: I am certain that it will make more sense to me when I read the entire article, but this paragraph is extremely confusing. At first, it is stated that the Jedi wanted to be involved, but then a description of a skirmish between the Jedi and Beast Riders is presented. Was the skirmish part of a diversion? Was it planned? Please connect these thoughts to clarify this paragraph.
 * 45) **Addressed.
 * 46) *"By the year 4,000 BBY, the Beast Riders managed to infiltrate the city and exchange information with its political underground." Is there any way to expand upon the infiltration? Were they simply trying to be civilian commoners? Was Kira among them? Also, what is "its" here: The Beast Rider group or the city?
 * 47) **Addressed.
 * 48) *"Realizing that the war with the Beast Riders was beyond their capability of winning&hellip;" "Their" is awkward in this instance, mostly because Amanoa, who is mentioned next, is a single individual. Can this be reworded?
 * 49) **Addressed.
 * 50) *"In response to a distress comlink from the Jedi's ship to the city, the Beast Riders' were repelled in their initial attack over Iziz's northern wall, suffering several casualties courtesy of the city's network of wall defenses." I see what is trying to be done, here, but could the reason for being repelled be reworded into the initial mention of it and then have the sentence broken apart into more concise, detailed ideas?
 * 51) **Addressed.
 * 52) *A few things thus far:
 * 53) **By this point in the Introduction, discussion of the Jedi wanting to be involved was mentioned. There is no mention of it in the "Background" section. Please rectify this, either in the background or the introduction.
 * 54) ***Addressed.
 * 55) **Revisiting the Introduction again: "Through their underground contacts, the Beast Riders learned that the Jedi requested involvement and had used their arrival as the distraction they required to carry out their plan." First, the pronouns "their" and "they" are convoluted. Who is being referred to: Jedi or Beast Riders? First, please clarify this in the Introduction. Then, if it is the Jedi, then a large part of the Background needs to be rewritten to thread the Jedi angle into it. If it is the Beast Riders, please discuss, in the Background section, about the distraction. The words "distraction" or "opportunity" are not used in that section, but stated in the Introduction.
 * 56) ***Addressed.
 * 57) *The first paragraph of the Aftermath is too short and unsourced.
 * 58) **Addressed.
 * 59) *The last paragraph of Aftermath is also too short.
 * 60) **Addressed.
 * 61) *I am pleased that the Tom Veitch interview is cited, but is there anything that can be gleaned from the Christian Gossett interview? Just a thought.
 * 62) **Addressed.
 * 63) *Additionally, is there nothing in The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia about the event? Surely, there is something.
 * 64) *There are many sources listed with no citations from them. While it is not a requirement, I would prefer that at least something be cited from most of them; especially the ones that are essential guides, or similar in function.
 * 65) **Addressed, though I will change a couple more when I get my source books back in hand.
 * 66) ***To be honest, and it's not something I'd properly object about, but I find that completely pointless. I definitely don't see how it helps the article. If new information is provided in a source, then it can get a ref note, but shoehorning them in just so we have stuff referenced seems a waste of time. Like I said, it's not I'd object to you doing, but I disagree with Fiolli on that point. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:48, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 67) *&mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:10, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Chack, was this supposed to be for the Raid on the Royal Palace article? If so, I've addressed each as you have stated. Thanks for the review! —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:54, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * Heh, yeah. Thanks.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:00, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
 * I am still working on this. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Really good work with some of the objections, but others look a bit rushed, with words missing here and there and some of my points not seeming to get across. Anyway, I'm up to the objections until "Galia's abduction," I plan to reply to the rest soon. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:40, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

Battle of Iziz (Beast Wars)

 * Nominated by: -- Tommy9281 11:29, 16 September 2008 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: WP:TOTJ will never die!

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Greyman ( Talk ) 05:04, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 22:56, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) —Xwing328 (Talk) 20:05, 24 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From Greyman:
 * 2) * Like I mentioned to you in #WP:TotJ the other day, that intro needs to be taken to the butcher shop and sliced-and-diced by quite a bit :P From giving it a quick glance over, everything else appears in order -- I'll give 'er a more thorough read within the coming days, Tommy :) Greyman ( Talk ) 13:41, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Addressed. Thank you for the review, and if there is anything else required, please advise. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:01, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) The audio drama is an adaptation, not an alternate and conflicting source. There really is no need for a template; a mention in the BtS is sufficient.  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:04, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I hate that template anyway. Removed. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 02:47, 2 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) **Given the precedent you set by removing the templates on Gobee's now-Featured article I have reverted the removal. I'm not sure either way but consistency is important. Please try and address this/you may want to open up a CT or whatever. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:04, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) *** I will be addressing this very, very, soon. A consensus track has been opened up regarding this issue. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:58, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) Ultimately, this has the same problem as the Raid on Iziz article, in that events are told exclusively from the perspective of the comic. Particular trouble spots are the revelation of the raid's intent, and Jeth's reason for coming to Onderon. This needs to be revised. Oron Kira only needs to be referred to as "Kira" after being introduced. In general, the prelude section could probably be slimmed down a touch, only to what is directly relevant to the battle. Thefourdotelipsis 09:14, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) *Addressed, I believe. Lemme know if this is what you were talking about, Fourdot. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 00:55, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) **I still see a "much to their surprise" ... :P Thefourdotelipsis 00:38, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Rectified. Thanks again, Fourdot. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 17:36, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 13) * Contextify Qel-Droma and his companions. You don't establish that they are the three Jedi sent to Onderon.
 * 14) **Addressed.
 * 15) * "before being led commed both his father and Commander Gobee, advising them to commence their counterstrikes," Confusing wording.
 * 16) **Addressed.
 * 17) * "A more powerful weapon" Could this section title possibly be reworded? It's unhelpful, vague, and flowery.
 * 18) **Addressed.
 * 19) * "Royal guard" Methinks this should either be Royal Guard, or royal guard, but not Royal guard. Do you know the correct usage?
 * 20) **Addressed.
 * 21) * "Before Qel-Droma could retrieve his sword, another Royal Protector attacked him and severed the downed Jedi's left arm." Is he using a sword or a lightsaber? Please clarify.
 * 22) **Addressed.
 * 23) * "Planetside, the spell caused darkness blacken the skies of Onderon, while thunder clapped and wind howled with voices of despair, which literally stifled the Jedi's ability to use the Force." Flowery prose and missing a word to boot.
 * 24) **Addressed.
 * 25) * The Aftermath section should not contain Jeth's confrontation with Amanoa. That is part of the actual battle, unless I'm gravely mistaken.
 * 26) **Addressed.
 * 27) * "Jeth and his companions followed a previously-untraveled path, until they came upon Queen Amanoa, " The path cannot be previously-untraveled if Amanoa used it. Please correct and clarify.
 * 28) **Addressed.
 * 29) * "It was here that Veitch laid a substantial foundation for Nadd" What does that mean? Are you talking about character? Backstory? His new condo on Manaan? :-P
 * 30) **Addressed.
 * 31) * Not an objection, but you have nine sources that are not referenced. None of them have anything new?
 * 32) **No, not anything different from the comics.
 * 33) * Second paragraph of BtS will need references to which comic arc Qel-Droma lost his arm in.
 * 34) **Addressed.
 * 35) * Other BtS segments that are not self-sourcing:
 * 36) ** "who was the story's underlying protagonist."
 * 37) ***Unable to directly source, removed.
 * 38) ** another of the many characters he created for the Tales of the Jedi series."
 * 39) ***Unable to directly source, removed.
 * 40) *Please check the Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia as a possible source.
 * 41) *Cleanup-tastic. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:48, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 42) "Having convinced the Princess..." This sentence needs some work, as it basically says the same thing twice.  —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:30, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) *Addressed. Thanks for the review, Xwing. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:56, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) Dedicated to my young friend Master Ooroo, who originally undertook this endeavor with me. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:01, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
 * I am still working on this. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 22:23, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you for striking your objection, Grae. Please advise if anything else is required. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 03:50, 10 January 2009 (UTC)

Mohs

 * Nominated by: Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Pure Lando Calrissian Trilogy pyramid-power crack. Check your laws of physics at the door - you're in for a wild, wild ride.

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Had no trouble with this when it was up for GA. Cull Tremayne 09:52, 19 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Just read this book for the first time.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:58, 3 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Me too. Thefourdotelipsis 13:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The last section of the biography, and its corresponding part in the intro, stray really far from the subject. The focus should stay on Mohs, with the Lando/Vuffi plot only in there for context on his story. Related to that, it also seems to be written in Vuffi's and Lando's perpective; you have comments like "revealed to be a Sharu", and the part where Lando returns to the ship to find what Mohs has become. It should be kept in the perspective of Mohs, so you talk about him changing into the other form and waiting for Lando in the Falcon. - Lord Hydronium 03:26, 20 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I think I've addressed this. Yrfeloran 07:56, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) In addition to Hydro's objection, the part where the perspective leapt out to me the most was when Mohs and Vaa "vanished" from Calrissian's sight. So, per Hydro. Thefourdotelipsis 09:19, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Specific objection addressed. Yrfeloran 07:56, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) From Xwing328:
 * 6) *Around the "Within the great pyramid" section: The previous sentence says they were transported into the pyramid. The next sentence says Mohs falls through the wall, and then Lando arrives. Could this method of transportation be clarified? Are they just falling through a wall or being beamed in?
 * 7) *Possibly a link to Mohs' mother.
 * 8) *You say the Falcon fled the system. This could use a touch of context, imo, but not too much to make the article focus more on Lando than Mohs. Were they running from something in particular, was the world being destroyed in its transformation, what? —Xwing328 (Talk) 01:54, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Toprawa:
 * 10) *A preliminary objection: I'm not a big fan of alternating between calling him a Sharu and a Toka between the infobox and the first sentence of the introduction, despite the pipelink. It's just confusing, and I would request choosing one or the other for uniformity. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:26, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * There's got to be some sort of award for "most consistently traitorous sidekick". Yrfeloran 08:02, 19 November 2008 (UTC)

Lando Calrissian

 * Nominated by: Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:35, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: From the two directors that brought you Tales of the Jedi and Wraith Squadron! From the project behind Jaina Solo! From the minds behind Mara Jade Skywalker, an action-packed adventure filled with suspense, betrayal, romance, and, of course, inimitable charm. Now playing: The smoothest FAN ever to grace this page, Lando Calrissian!

(2 Inqs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) As co-nominator. Greyman ( Talk ) 20:45, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Objections will be fixed soon as sources are checked by several users, including myself.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  01:29, 22 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Imperialles 23:56, 24 January 2009 (UTC)

I dare object to Lando
 * 1) No info whatsoever from Lando Calrissian: Idiot's Array and Crisis on Cloud City. Not smooth. Thefourdotelipsis 03:04, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *The latter has been addressed; I've asked Borsk about the former. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Former is also addressed now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Ditto Galaxy Guide 2: Yavin and Bespin. - Lord Hydronium 03:10, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *I've went ahead and added a sentence or two of some background information for this objection. I looked over my copy of the source again and couldn't see anything new beyond the sentences I just added. Is there something specific you're thinking of that I could work in? Greyman ( Talk ) 13:51, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ** There's some other bits on pages 50, 76, and 88. - Lord Hydronium 08:27, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Information added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * The mentions of Ymile are rather confusingly arranged. There's a picture of her near where Lando wins the bet with Raynor, but no reference to her in the text, then much later in the article it mentions she helped Lando win. That second part should be noted and clarified at the time it actually occurs; also, she should be linked there, since she isn't at the moment. - Lord Hydronium 00:39, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Succession box should include Treece; Action Tidings and the Cloud City Databank entry both say he was the Administrator of Cloud City. - Lord Hydronium 00:41, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fixed the Ymile bits and buffed Lady Luck overall. Also, adjusted succession box, reffed from the actual Marvel comics though. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:15, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Information missing on how Lando got back Cloud City, from The New Essential Guide to Characters. Geonosis and the Outer Rim Worlds not in; amongst the things to add is a bit in there about how Lando raised Tibanna profits that's also in the NEC. - Lord Hydronium 07:29, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **The Tibanna profits bit is already in there, just referenced from another source. The Cloud City re-taking has been added. Still working on GATOW. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Two tidbits from GATORW added. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:41, 11 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ****Added it to the "Sources" list as well. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) ***Oh, I see; I was searching for "percent". - Lord Hydronium 19:52, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * More NEGTC tidbits: Lando giving control of Cloud City to the Ugnaughts after Zorba cedes it. Lando refusing to go to Chewbacca's funeral out of guilt. From GG3: Lobot convinced Lando to help Leia and the group. - Lord Hydronium 07:45, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **All of the above fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:11, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *More missing sources: Rebellion Era Sourcebook, Roleplaying Game Revised Core Rulebook, Roleplaying Game: Saga Edition Core Rulebook, Dark Empire Sourcebook, The Truce at Bakura Sourcebook, Han Solo and the Corporate Sector Sourcebook (I just spotted a small mention, but there could be more), Heir to the Empire Sourcebook, The Last Command Sourcebook, and Star Wars Trilogy Sourcebook - Special Edition. For now. - Lord Hydronium 23:23, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Rebellion Era Sourcebook is listed now, but it needs information from it. There's some on Page 111, for a start. - Lord Hydronium 07:01, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) ***The info on that page was already in the article. Could you tell me what specifically you are referring to? And the rest of the sourcebooks have been checked and added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 19:18, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) * for The Truce at Bakura, but it contains unique information to add. - Lord Hydronium 23:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) **Fixed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) *In addition to the above, the following appearances and mentions are missing: Out of the Closet: The Assassin's Tale, Darksaber, Force Heretic I: Remnant, Therefore I Am: The Tale of IG-88, Payback: The Tale of Dengar, The Last One Standing: The Tale of Boba Fett, X-wing: Rogue Squadron, X-wing: Wedge's Gamble, X-wing: Wraith Squadron, Young Jedi Knights: Heirs of the Force, Young Jedi Knights: The Lost Ones, Young Jedi Knights: Lightsabers, Young Jedi Knights: Darkest Knight, Young Jedi Knights: Shards of Alderaan, Young Jedi Knights: Jedi Bounty, and Young Jedi Knights: The Emperor's Plague. - Lord Hydronium 01:17, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) **Chack and I have addressed these. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Almost forgot: None of the movie novelizations or radio dramas are included. - Lord Hydronium 01:19, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) **This particular objection has been addressed, along with adding a number of other ESB and ROTJ-related appearances. I've checked both novelizations and will check with Tope to make sure there's no new info in the radio dramas. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:19, 1 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) **Han will have these objections down! We've gotta give them more time! (In all seriousness, we are working on these). Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:40, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) *Sorry, haven't checked those yet, but another: Galaxywide NewsNets from Adventure Journal 14. "Calrissian Resurfaces as Baron Administrator". - Lord Hydronium 06:36, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) **Mined. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:45, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) Gah, redlinks in source list, mine Databank and Wizards. Those first two totally slipped me mind.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:19, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) *Red links busted. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:56, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) *Databank has been mined and source list updated. Greyman ( Talk ) 15:32, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) Infobox not fully/correctly sourced.  Graestan ( Talk ) 04:24, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) *I think I got the missing reference. If you desire other sourcing, please let me know. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:22, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) **Got it on the second try. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) I'd like to take Yrf's comment below and turn it into an actual objection; for instance, I know there are quotes to be had by or about Lando and/or what he was up to at the time for the LCA, TTT, and BFC. Ideally, since the sections are so long, each should probably have a quote.  Graestan ( Talk ) 13:48, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) *All sections now have quotes except three tiny sections in the "Non-canon appearances" section in the BtS since quotes do not exist for those parts. Greyman ( Talk ) 16:32, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) **Hope you found at least one funny one from LCA. ;) Graestan ( Talk ) 23:12, 25 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Lando91.jpg, Image:LanLukVil.jpg, Image:Weaklando.jpg, Image:Lando&Luke Marvel71.jpg and Image:Lando&Han captive.jpg could all do with a re-scan. Other than that, excellent work, and about time! :) --Imperialles 13:08, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *All done. I was bored and Ataru mentioned it at the right time. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:16, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Image placement is irrelevant to the text in a number of locations. SinisterSamurai 07:32, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) *I've moved a few things around. As it stands, there are two images that aren't directly pertinent to the sections they are in: the Caamas Document crisis section, and in the Kessel investment sections, where we used generic Lando images to fill gaps that would have left lots of text with no complimentary images. As it is, there's a good balance of images to compliment the text, but by removing those, the article's appearance would suffer accordingly. And there is article precedent for using generic images to fill "gaps". If there were more relevant images that could be substituted in, just point me in their direction and I'll gladly change it, but for now, it should stay as it is. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:03, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Looks good.
 * 5) Needs info from Star Wars: Power of the Jedi. Thefourdotelipsis 08:54, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Added.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:55, 8 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not a formal objection, but there's space for a lot more quotes in the article. Yrfeloran 04:13, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

Second Battle of Bakura (Galactic Civil War)

 * Nomination by: - Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first major project here and a significant Expanded Universe event. I managed to correct most of the errors so it is up to you now to decide. Andykatib 5:51, 23 November 2008 (UTC)

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Support

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * The intro could do a better job of setting the stage for the Battle of Bakura. How did the Rebels get there? How did the battle start? Etc. By and large, this needs to be about doubled in length
 * 3) * Redlinks in infobox.
 * 4) * You'll need a link to the conquest of G'rho
 * 5) * Who is "The Admiral" mentioned in 3rd paragraph of Background? Please provide context.
 * 6) *You'll need to explain the advantages of enteching humans a little more clearly please for the sake of the reader, as well as Sibwarra's role therein.
 * 7) * Is Shreeftut or whatever a title or person? There should be consistent capitalization depending on which one it is.
 * 8) * Please limit the use of parentheses in articles.
 * 9) *Per Toprawa in that a lot of the article goes beyond the scope of its topic. Some topics I would recommend shortening:
 * 10) **The Imperial takeover of Bakura could easily be reduced to a single paragraph.
 * 11) **The interception of the message droid by the Rebels could also be shortened.
 * 12) **The Truce section could also be shortened some&mdash;it gets into a lot of play-by-play.
 * 13) **You don't need drastic cuts, IMHO, just some trimming and condensing here and there. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:01, 4 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *Correct these and I will continue my review. I would also caution you to beware of POV. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) Toprawa:
 * 16) *I didn't think I'd ever say this, but this article is way too detailed. This isn't so much an article on the battle as it's a summary of the novel itself. I would strongly recommend going through and strictly condensing the narration into details about actual conflict. A good prelude summary is always essential for a battle article, but be careful of going off on extraneous tangents from the battle itself. As a way of keeping the article focused, try sectioning it into three major sections, "Prelude," "The battle," and "Aftermath," and subsection from there. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:38, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *I just finished re-reading through TaB last night, and after perusing the TaB Sourcebook this morning, while it may be a bit radical, this article, as it is written right now, should really be under the title "Bakura Incident," to encompass the entire proceedings, and a separate, much shorter, less-comprehensive article should be devoted to the final battle taking place in the book. Really, that final battle should be under the title "Third Battle of Bakura" and the battle taking place at the beginning of the book should be under "Second Battle." Moreover, our article Bakura Truce, I believe, should simply be a redirect to a "Bakura Incident" article. If you're willing, Andy, I would recommend just reworking the introduction a little bit, and perhaps any other necessary parts of the article, to reflect the greater Incident, and try to nominate that. It would certainly take less work on your part. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:00, 14 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Andy, I personally agree with Toprawa. The Bakura Incident includes so many angles, the Rebel Alliance, the Ssi-ruuvi Imperium and the Galactic Empire. All three have their own agenda and there is much chaos that ensues. Great work has been done in writing the article, but I think it could be moved and reworked a touch to encompass all three angles, as well. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:39, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) References needed in the infobox for:
 * 20) *Strength -> Orbital Repair Platform
 * 21) *Casualties -> 60+ TIE/ln starfighters
 * 22) *Casualties -> Half of the garrison defected to the Alliance, dead or missing —Xwing328 (Talk) 02:31, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not bad for a first shot, but this will need some work. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:18, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * I managed to correct bullet points 1, 2, 3, 4 and 6 to my best abilities though I will need help with points five and seven. I haven't be able to do that much work on Wookieepedia because I am preoccupied with other things in Malaysia though I found some really good, cheap Star Wars books and comics that I like. Andykatib 05:45, 21 December 2008 (UTC)

The Trickery of Vosdia Nooma

 * Nomination by: 19:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Because setting precedents seems to be my thing, I present to you: Rodian Theater at its finest!

(5 Inqs/0 users/5 total)
Support
 * 1) --Eyrezer 19:39, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Quite cool with the articles for the characters in the play. Cull Tremayne 14:34, 19 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Nice work, Jorrel.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:37, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) -- Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 10:54, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Nothing like a bit of the old ultra-violence.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 14:25, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Very nice, but you need to get rid of that redlink in the intro, per Rule 8. --Eyrezer 17:29, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Thanks, and busted. Totally forgot about that one. 17:48, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:RodiaNEGAS.jpg is &hellip;bad. Also, image captions need punctuation. --Imperialles 16:13, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Actually, Imp, there's no policy in regards to your second objection. It's up to the nominator whether or not they choose to punctuate their captions.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:45, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **You seem to be correct. I have created a CT thread on the issue. --Imperialles 11:30, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) ***With the CT closed, I have adjusted the image captions accordingly. Also, per Culator below, the picture's as good as it's going to get. 19:27, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *It's really not that bad. I have a copy of the book and a brand new scanner, and it's not coming out any better. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:27, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) You have treated Equator City as a place on Coruscant, althouth the link goes to a city on Rodia. Reading through the HNN article, I think it is more likely that the play was actually released on Rodia, not Coruscant. Other context supports this, ie "The Rodian political campaigning season is in full effect, and the Drama Council of Senator Farr's government has unveiled their pro-Military Creation Act work" suggests it is aimed at the Rodain audience. This will also allow you to use the image of Equator City in the article. --Eyrezer 16:33, 15 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Project started because of Lord Hydronium's QOTD nom listed here. Go and read it (and vote if you'd like). It essentially embodies the entire play and will be a nice setup for your readthrough (which is actually pretty long for being single-source and information culled from a review). Thank god for HoloNet News entries. 19:33, 29 November 2008 (UTC)

Tam Elgrin

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 04:03, 3 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first-ever GA, over 1000 words, so I thought, "What the hell. I'll try it."

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Next time, though, make sure you copyedit more thoroughly, 'cuz I might not be able to fix everything. ;-)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:54, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Aaaallston!!! Cull Tremayne 00:55, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:01, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * The intro could be a little longer. Try expanding it from stuff relevant to Danni Quee and Tarc.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Contextify Antilles on first mention.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * P&T can be much, much larger. (And should be).
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) ***Yes, but you did so with a lot of redundant referencing. Not that I couldn't go in and fix it, but some lessons are better learned by experience. If two sentences in a row are referenced from the same source, there's no need to add additional tags. Additionally, the P&T doesn't flow well and could use restructuring. Take it slow, organize it well instead of rushing the fix. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:36, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Addressed, I hope.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:44, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *****There's a whole bunch on pages 159-162 of the paperback that could go in there. Take your pick, but in particular, some of Tser's comments are really good stuff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:53, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ******Well this objection was a doozy, wasn't it? :) Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 03:20, 7 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * The relationship with the Solos, Tarc, and Elgrin should be expanded.
 * 13) **Addressed. Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 23:27, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *Due to my large knowledge of Enemy Lines, I was able to do a lot of cleanup myself, but be aware that there was lots needed. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:53, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) "However, by reviewing Elgrin's Coruscant recording, Danni Quee discovered that Elgrin's story was a lie; Elgrin was alone, and thus did not escape the Yuuzhan Vong." - A little bit of elaboration on how this conclusion was made would be appreciated. Thefourdotelipsis 03:18, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) "Elgrin was an awkward man..." This is awkward. I don't like this wording (first sentence of P&T). Otherwise, good job.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  03:19, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *All righty. Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:25, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) I was just sitting down to read this, but noticed I should leave preliminaries: The P&T is far too windy and seems to completely retell portions of the story. Please make it more concise and to-the-point. Graestan ( Talk ) 06:54, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Zonder

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:02, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part of FourDotProject: Evasive Action

(3 Inqs/0 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nice. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:30, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Sure doesn't look like any Selonian I've ever seen.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  03:49, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Ekria is next then? Cull Tremayne 06:01, 30 December 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) "Offee, being a healer, was sent to Felucia in the waning stages of the war, and Zonder accompanied her." The connection with Offee being a healer and being sent to Felucia isn't clear here. Might be best to clarify or remove it. "At Employment Center D4176, which was meant for non-Humans only." Not sure if this was meant to be part of the previous sentence or the next, or if it's missing something. Other than that, excellent, and I only just noticed the Jokhalli/divot thing, which is really cool. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 02:05, 17 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *First is tweaked, second has been fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 07:02, 21 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Maybe there should be something in there about how his active life was untypical for Selonian males? Yrfeloran 22:32, 7 December 2008 (UTC)

IG-72

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Interesting at first but it goes downhill from there.

(4 Inqs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) IGs are awesome.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:11, 6 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Kill. Kill. Kill. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:50, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Ah, what a crappy main image. Cull Tremayne 20:53, 31 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:51, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "gaining notoriety for the IG-series" A bit of context on why the fact that he was of the IG series was notable waould be good.
 * 3) **I think you're misinterpreting the text. Its saying that his actions as a bounty hunter made more people aware of the existence of the IG-series.
 * 4) ***Bah! I completely misread that. I thought you mean the was notable because he was an IG.
 * 5) * Can we get a date on his hunt for Tallon in the intro?
 * 6) **Done.
 * 7) * What were his seemingly random choice of targets? You mention that his targets appeared random to many. Do we know what was the pattern was, then?
 * 8) **Not really. The implication is that he was taking down people for the Empire, but it's not canonically established.
 * 9) ***I suspected that this wasn't revealed (it's not like you to miss stuff). No problems here then.
 * 10) * "The four IG-88s carried on with their planned Droid Revolution, but by the time of the Battle of Endor they had all been destroyed or deactivated." I'd say this bit is unneeded.
 * 11) **Well, I don't like to end bios too suddenly, and this sentence essentially serves as a compressed legacy section. It's not essential but I think it's somewhat relevant and does more good than harm.
 * 12) ***You're right. I was a little unsure about this objection for that reason.
 * 13) *Good work overall.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:39, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) **Thank you very much. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:55, 5 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) Why no mention of his stealing the Moldy Crow (just before the Teth thing), per  and the CSWE? --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:16, 28 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *Because I wasn't aware of its existence. :-P Now added. Good spot. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:34, 28 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) Good. Now what about the fact that his remains were never found, according to CSWE? --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 06:03, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) *Added the "physical evidence of the destruction was ever found" (though I'd already done that...), if that's what you're referring to. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:26, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Didn't see it before. Now I do. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:50, 29 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) Toprawa:
 * 21) * Are you sure he appears in the Rebellion era? The Rebellion era starts with the Battle of Toprawa, 0 BBY, which would mean that his death in Tatooine Manhunt would need to take place within the short number of days/weeks between Toprawa and the Battle of Yavin.
 * 22) **Yep, it does; it's semi-concurrent with ANH.
 * 23) *I'm left itching for more information here: "IG-88A invited IG-72 to allow him to upload his own programming and memory onto IG-72's computer core, as the the other IG-88 droids had done, so that he would join them." Join them how? A little bit more here.
 * 24) **Added a little bit. Let me know if you'd like more.
 * 25) ***I'm not sure what happened, but your second edit removed all of the changes in response to my objections. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:35, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) * I've taken this sentence out of the biography. It just seems rather out of place in the flow of the article, and it's really more P/T info anyways. If you would like to salvage any of this for the P/T, I would encourage it: "IG-72 was known to prefer dead bounties to live ones, and lived to kill beings"
 * 27) **Added a variation of it to the P&T.
 * 28) *I'm not sure the "Despite" works here. It would seem to me appropriate that he avoid the Core Worlds because of his criminal prominence: "Despite his prominence in criminal circles, IG-72 avoided the Core Worlds" Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:36, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) **Removed the despite.
 * 30) ***It was replaced per everything else. Still, can we say "Because of his prominence..."? I don't know how much that fits. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:35, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) *Can you be more specific here with a location and incident? During the docking bay fight on Tatooine, for ex? "and used explosives in a heavily-populated area."
 * 32) **Done.
 * 33) *Is there nothing to say for his presence on Cloud City with Jodo Kast and the Gang?
 * 34) **I wouldn't say so. It's just cover art - there's nothing to say about Leia's presence on Tatooine in this picture, for example.
 * 35) * Can we specify which sources these are? "However, later sources have established that the later option is the canonical outcome." Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:43, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) **It's got two ref tags - do you want me to spell it out in the prose? Thank you for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:14, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 37) ***I went ahead and did so. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:35, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) *Following my BTS edits, I don't know what year this is referring to. 1995 or 1989? Also, what source describes this? Pretty vague here. "In the same year, an "IG-series assassin droid" is described as the companion of Dace Bonearm; subsequent sources have established this to be IG-72." Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:35, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Working on getting a better infobox image. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:14, 4 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Due to constant removal of information/ addition of fanon, I have protected the article from anon editors. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:00, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Ylenic It'kla

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 08:52, 10 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You'd think he'd be more interesting.

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Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 14:36, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Jedi Master Walon 00:20, 28 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:38, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 13:20, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Can you be more specific as to the FactFiles entries? Ie, the format in the current CT. --Eyrezer 16:50, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Things
 * 3) * "It'kla, insisting that his talents for discussion would prove useful, joined his friend, and another Jedi, a general who It'kla knew as "Desertwind", led them." This sentence ends funny if I'm not mistaken. Who led them? And if you're just interjecting that long bit into, "It'kla led them", then I'd like to see the sentence split up more so that it isn't so confusing at first glance.
 * 4) **Desertwind led them; I broke it up, so it should be clearer.
 * 5) ***That makes a bit more sense then.
 * 6) * The search section could do with a little more clarification. Suarbi links to the star. Is it meant to link to Suarbi 7? Since that article says that Suarbi 7 is a gas giant, how could It'kla and friends talk to the locals there? Also, you introduce Susevfi without telling us that it's a moon of Suarbi. Cull Tremayne 16:36, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **I have no idea about Suarbi; POTJ just says "Suarbi" and doesn't clarify. Added a bit that Susevfi was a moon. - Lord Hydronium 23:26, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 9) * "It'kla rarely used his lightsaber, preferring to solve situations with negotiation or diplomacy." Seems to fit more in P&T; didn't move it there in case you had an explanation. Regardless, this and the previous sentence aren't really all that pertinent to the bio.
 * 10) * Contextify Secura on first mention in Bio section.
 * 11) * I believe we generally use separate links in image captions. Please link appropriately.
 * 12) * Conflict on Baltizaar should be linked.
 * 13) * "Eleven years after It'kla's death, A'Kla provided it to the Jensaarai, a group of Force-users formed out of Tyris' teachings; though they had been laboring under a misapprehension about the Jedi and their motives for decades, after seeing the events from It'kla's point of view, the Force sect was able to be coaxed into once again opening dialogue with the Jedi Order." Massive run-on.
 * 14) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:44, 30 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **All addressed on IRC or in the article. - Lord Hydronium 02:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * "For almost his entire life, It'kla was friends with the Corellian Jedi Nejaa Halcyon" doesn't work in light of the fact that It'kla survived Halcyon by 20 years or so. Thefourdotelipsis 04:41, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Reworded it...I'm not sure how great the replacement is, so tell me if it still needs work. - Lord Hydronium 02:16, 17 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Now that's what I call a succinct P&A. I'm guessing we don't know what new Force techniques he developed to escape Palpatine's agents? Also, is there a link to the unknown Dark Jedi that Desertwind fought? Cull Tremayne 16:36, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * No to the first. To the second: the one on Susevfi? The mention of his opponent is pipelinked to Dustrose. - Lord Hydronium 23:26, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Right, but I thought Ylenic fought Dustrose. Do we know who Desertwind fought? We don't have an article for that unnamed darksider do we? Cull Tremayne 14:36, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Oh, Desertwind. Sorry, misread it. No, we don't seem to have an article on them. - Lord Hydronium 01:44, 28 December 2008 (UTC)

Missile Boat

 * Nominated by: MIS Tau 1 22:28, 12 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I've merged/deleted/restored this article similar to it's FA status

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Support
 * 1) Looks to be back where it was. Thefourdotelipsis 04:52, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Back to where it was when it was first reviewed. Cull Tremayne 10:16, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A paragraph in History is unsourced. Also, wasn't Thrawn an admiral when the missile boat was developed? If so, you should refer to him as "Admiral Thrawn" in the intro.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:53, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) From the Chron-O-John of Green Tentacle:
 * 3) *The infobox isn't fully sourced.
 * 4) *Fourth paragraph of history isn't sourced.
 * 5) *"The abundance of missiles led to the development of previously unorthodox tactics, much to the chagrin of Imperial commanders, as advanced missiles were relatively expensive." Can you check that? I don't recall the game mentioning Imperial commanders having issues with its use.
 * 6) *"It was at this time that Thrawn revealed his new starfighter, the Missile Boat, to the Emperor." This too. Can't find a specific reference of when he first informed Palpy about it.
 * 7) *The hull's RU rating could be mentioned under shields and armor.
 * 8) *"Despite all efforts by Missile Boat pilots, the Empire was forced to evacuate the research platforms." V1 & V2 should probably be split into two articles, both of which should be linked in here.
 * 9) *"Missile Boats were responsible on more than one occasion for protecting convoys carrying other Missile Boats from Zaarin's raiders." Only one that I can find since the other was a decoy.
 * 10) *According to the game, Zaarin's destruction of the few Missile Boat manufacturing facilities also contributed to their withdrawal from service.
 * 11) *Maarek Stele should probably be mentioned a little earlier than he is, since he was involved in most of this. A little context for him might be useful too.
 * 12) *The BTS could be expanded a little. For example, the usual stuff about its first appearance and that it was limited to multiplayer in XWA.
 * 13) *There's no mention of the training missions. If not a training section, then they should at least be mentioned under history as they appear to be simulations of some of the ship's early uses. Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:43, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

IG-88A

 * Nominated by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Finally, it's done. The walking, canon defying droid!

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Support
 * 1) Killer. Cull Tremayne 19:57, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Excellent. Quite polished. Thefourdotelipsis 23:39, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Stuff
 * 2) * How sure are we that the picture being used is IG-88A? Isn't it more likely that it's IG-88B?
 * 3) **Added another image.
 * 4) ***Nice.
 * 5) * Can we get more detail on his reactivation? I'm thinking specifically in regards to his appearance in Star Wars 85: The Hero. How did he fail to capture Lando? What was his role there?
 * 6) **Added some info. I'm pretty sure that's all IG-88A did in that comic.
 * 7) *** Hate to object further, but it's missing a few key points as to how the comic concluded and IG-88A's role in it. Specifically, I'm thinking of the death of this guy, and some more details as to how Drebble failed to bring Lando back to his homeworld. Cull Tremayne 16:04, 26 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ****Expanded it a bit more. I don't want to stray too far from IG-88A.
 * 9) *****Much better.
 * 10) * In addition, is that really all we know about his role in YJK? You were able to get three whole sections just from the short story "I Think Therefore I Am". Surely more can be mined from three books than a paragraph and a half.
 * 11) **It's been expanded, but IG-88A is really a background character in the stories. He has a pretty minor role, and in Delusions of Grandeur he's only present for like one page.
 * 12) ***Fair enough.
 * 13) * Beef up the BtS please. Explain how TNEGtC explained that it was IG-88A in Marvel. Explain why it needs to be IG-88A in Forces of Corruption and not IG-88B. (He is able to infect the Death Star, etc.) Explain his weird appearance in Kenix Kil: The Bounty Hunters and why it needs to be IG-88A. I don't think it's specified that it's IG-88A in that story, there's only a pic of him.
 * 14) **BTS greatly expanded. Let me know if something still needs improvement.
 * 15) * Gotta question some of the sources and appearances there. Why do we assume that it's IG-88A in Lego Star Wars, or the Complete Visual Dictionary? Is he specifically mentioned as such? Unless IG-88A is mentioned specifically, it probably shouldn't be listed should it?
 * 16) **Corrected.
 * 17) * Sorta in conjunction with the previous objection. Should we be using Image:IG-88 equipment.jpg? It's essentially the same image as Image:IG88B.jpg, meant to represent IG-88B. So is this pic actually of IG-88A specifically?
 * 18) **Replaced.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 12:50, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) *Other than that, nice to see Count Droidfish's balonium wiped away. Nice job. Cull Tremayne 00:12, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) I think the Equipment and abilities section should be proseified and expanded. I'd expect it to be quite large given the amount of info I think we know. I think the P&T could be expanded a fair bit too; it should talk about his self-confidence or whatever you'd call it, his ambition, etc. The BtS could also be expanded a bit with his history and the original stuff from WEG/EGtC and the differences with it and Tales. (I know I said that wouldn't be necessary but on second thought I think it is). -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:29, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) *I still think a mention of the fact that his - or, at the time, "IG-88"'s - backstory originated from WEG (namely, Galaxy Guide 3), until Anderson adapted and expanded it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:07, 1 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) **Fixed now, I think.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:52, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 23) ***Looks good. I'd like to see the WEG stuff pushed up a little in the BtS, ideally before Therefore I Am is mentioned. You could go from talking about ESB to mentioning WEG creating the backstory, and then go on to Therefore I Am, and then go into the details about WEG, or something like that. That's my suggestion, anyway. :) Overall the BtS looks a little unwieldly...it could possibly be reorganized a tad, but I'll have a proper look tomorrow or Friday and get back to you on that with more specifics. The stuff about IG-88D and SotE doesn't seem very relevant, though - I'd suggest axing it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:20, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) I think the BTS needs to be structured more appropriately for the character's OOU history; he wasn't really created for ESB if that character turned out not to even be him. Don't feel you have to do the standard linear "He was created for X, used in Y, etc." format if it doesn't really fit for the character. - Lord Hydronium 06:23, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *Fixed.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 17:52, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * After reading IG-72, why not read this one?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 00:02, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Ronderu lij Kummar

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:19, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A really neat character who may well be marginalized by later stuff.

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Support
 * 1) I FA'd Grievous, after all.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:18, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Cull Tremayne 18:16, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) I remember when rock was young, me and Susie had so much fun... Thefourdotelipsis 05:58, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) "Jenuwaa dragged her body out to see" Is it supposed to be "sea"? Also, I think you may want to change the wording, since it took me a minute to realize that the Jenuwaa was not a species. Otherwsie, very well done. I sure hope TCW doesn't destroy her character.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  16:41, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Whoops. Reworded for clarity. Thanks; I hope so too. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:06, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:Rond.jpg and Image:QymaenRonderuHuks.jpg are somewhat distorted&mdash;rescan. --Imperialles 16:08, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *Much better now, courtesy of Joe Corroney's website. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:25, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Yuhp
 * 3) * Last sentence in the first section. "She became known as the Kummar, or the Incubus." Is this related in some way to the earlier sentence about possibly killing her family? Either way, can we get some transition into this sentence? Or maybe an explanation for how she got this nickname?
 * 4) **There's no real explanation or elaboration about how or why she got the name, merely that she did.
 * 5) ***Still wouldn't mind a better transition, rather than just having a throwaway sentence. But since there's no further info, what can you do? :P
 * 6) * Somewhat related to the earlier objection. In the second section: "Because of the nature of their introduction to each other, it was believed that they were living manifestations of the cryptic parable Sheelal, or The Dreamer/The Dreamt One." Are you sure that Grievous was a living manifestation of the parable "Sheelal"? I was under the impression that it was called "Sheelal" in tribute as a result of Grievous' exploits? Not true? If so, that's a pretty big coincidence that he embodied the legend of his namesake. If it is the case that the legend was named after Grievous, then how could Ronderu become known as the "Kummar"? She became known as her last name? Maybe this is just me misunderstanding Kaleesh culture, but it gets a bit confusing for the reader, with nicknames popping up that are quite similar to the actual character's names. If it has more to do with Ronderu "earning" her last name, I wouldn't mind having that spelled out in the article.
 * 7) **Good points. The problem is that the articles keep it very vague. I think the implication is that Grievous got the name "Sheelal" from the parable, and Ronderu the name "Kummar" from her nickname, so they were sort of titles and weren't named that from birth. I've changed the article to reflect this. It's probably a little bit confusing, still, but let me know what you think.
 * 8) ***Works a bit better. Nothing you can do when the source material is being intentionally vague. Cull Tremayne 18:16, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) * Related to the earlier objection, is there no article for the parable of "The Dreamer/The Dreamt One"? If not, a redlink to such an article should probably be made. Cull Tremayne 17:12, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) **Redlinked. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:40, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Nice job. Cull Tremayne 18:16, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * "Ronderu was a female Kaleesh native to Kalee, though her kin knew precious little other than that; some even questioned that she ever existed." - Is kin really the suitable word here? If your kin doubt you exist, I'd say you're in trouble, existence-wise. :P Thefourdotelipsis 11:20, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **Altered a little bit. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:41, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * I know from conversing with Abel at Celebration IV that Ronderu is at least partly based on Enkidu, the ambiguous wildman companion of Gilgamesh. Alas, I don't know if this detail is online anywhere; according to the last couple of sentences of this blog of Abel's, it's due to be a blog of its own someday, but alas, that day has not yet come.  Might be worth rummaging around to see if you can find something on it elsewhere on the net, though. jSarek 11:42, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Buran Borsil

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:19, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Former GA. Part of the somewhat on-hold AckyProject GOSS. 1,141 words.

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Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:09, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Cull Tremayne 17:30, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) I have no idea how he was not included in the CSWE. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:57, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 20:18, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Do we need the explanation of what a Nord is? Wouldn't that be more suited to the Nord article? Thefourdotelipsis 07:01, 21 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Well, I sort of wanted to convey the message that he's three feet tall. Even if it's a species trait and not something unique to him personally, I think it's kind of important to mention it and not rely on people using links to what is a thoroughly uninformative article. It's like if there was, say, a twelve-foot tall inside-out guy who was otherwise pretty plain and boring, I think we should mention his height because otherwise people would think he's just a plain and boring guy, if that makes any sense. The way I look at it, it's something that a licensed author would want to know if he/she was browsing the site, and as it is is the best way to convey the info. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:21, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Not an objection, but could you try to get at least one of the redlinks filled in sometime?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:09, 24 December 2008 (UTC)
 * The last sentence of the P&T seems to suggest that Warren was a member of the Alliance, since you go straight from high-ranking rebels to "Others, such as..." That might just be a wording choice though. Cull Tremayne 17:30, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Reworded it a tad. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:41, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

Dur Gejjen

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 08:11, 21 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: This article was almost comically short before.

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Support
 * 1)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 01:59, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Headshot! Boom!  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:55, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Jaina Solo:
 * 2) * There's no mention of his young family.
 * 3) **There isn't any real info on his family. Just that he's Nov Gejjen's son.
 * 4) * "Little did Gejjen know, the Galactic Alliance, Gejjen's enemies, had acquired proof that Gejjen was behind the assassination attempt on an Alliance ally, Tenel Ka."--How did they acquire the proof?
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * "Solo formulated a plan: Galactic Alliance Chief of State Cal Omas would meet Gejjen on the Deep Core planet of Vulpter. Omas would come under the guise of peace, calling for an end to the ever-escalating conflict between the Galactic Alliance and the Confederation forces."--This needs to be cleared up a little. If I recall, Jacen didn't plan the meeting between Omas and Gejjen. How did he know that Gejjen was meeting with Omas on Vulpter? -- Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 00:30, 22 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 02:41, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) Some concerns have been listed on his talk page by an anon. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:50, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) *They have been addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 02:28, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Chack Attack:
 * 11) * Your quote says that Antilles resigned, but twice in the article you say that Gejjen fired him. Which is it?
 * 12) *It's weird. He fire him, but Wedge basically said "You can't fire me, because I quit!"
 * 13) **I'd like to see it clarified a bit in the article. Something to the effect of: "Though Gejjen tried to fire Antilles, the general resigned instead" would be good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:45, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * "set up the coup on the life of Sal-Solo." This should be rewritten to make it smoother.
 * 15) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( Come with me if you want to live. ) 00:48, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) *Otherwise, it's very good.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:35, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Sev'rance Tann

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:35, 23 December 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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Support
 * 1) What, no support yet? Seems OK to me Enochf 20:10, 15 January 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *Seems to me that there should be some more battle links in the intro. Tann stole the Decimators. Another possible link for her death on Krant, no?
 * 3) **Linked Battle of Krant, every other battle is already linked.
 * 4) *The link between Sarapin and plunging the Core into darkness is not contextified in the intro.
 * 5) **To be honest I don't think it really needs to be - this happened and this happened as a result of it, and the specifics of why aren't particularly important at this point - but I've added in a small mention of the geothermal generators.
 * 6) *"Although very successful," A bit POVish. (intro).
 * 7) **Reworked a tad.
 * 8) *"Welcome to the Sarapin System, Sev'Rane. You now stand before one of the most heavily guarded planets in the Galaxy" Is the typo in her name in the game?
 * 9) **Nope, Enochf fixed it.
 * 10) *Second paragraph of "Into the Core Worlds" could use some variety with diction. Particularly since we're talking about "power relays", the word "powerful" just seems . . . off. I dunno, could just be me.
 * 11) *Contextify Jabba on first mention.
 * "k, they are not referring to in the game itself, so presumably others were unaware of her origins" Wording is a bit off here.
 * 1) *All small objections overall&mdash;good work, Acky. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:45, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Blah
 * 3) *In the Battles on Sarapin section: "Additionally, lava blowholes dotted the area, with magma containing deep within fissures spitting out frequently, destroying anything that was standing over the blowhole." Needs a reword. Is this supposed to be, "with magma contained deep within fissures that spewed lava frequently"? Or something similar?
 * 4) *Under the P&T, end of second section: "she killed one of the wild creatures she had been told to tame despite him having done nothing wrong, in order to engender obedience among his comrades." The length of this sentence is a bit unwieldy, mind splitting it up?
 * 5) *Last sentence of P&T: "Ultimately, Tann was more at home as the general than the Dark Acolyte; none were able to outfox her tactically during the month she lasted of the Clone Wars, but she was defeated in lightsaber combat." Why the general and the Dark Acolyte? Should that be "as a general" and "than a Dark Acolyte"? Only because "the Dark Acolyte" reads weird, since there were plenty of them. Additionally, "during the month she lasted of the Clone Wars". Is "of the Clone Wars" the best way to say that? This whole sentence could use a reword. Cull Tremayne 08:14, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Nice work on the images there :) Yrfeloran 06:50, 25 December 2008 (UTC)
 * I notice that you mention that Tann lead from the front several times, with the source linking to the game. Can we be sure that this isn't just game mechanics, or the gamer's choice? You don't have to bring Tann along on all these attacks do you? In fact, can't you just load her into a shuttle or something and bring her along? If its possible to play the game without her leading from the front, should those mentions remain? Cull Tremayne 08:14, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

Ketcher

 * Nominated by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 17:55, 2 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Don't go swallowing strange objects, kids.

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 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 00:10, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Read this earlier. Forgot to vote. Cull Tremayne 09:50, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *"Stele went on to become part of the group" What group?
 * 3) *"pilots who proved vital in repelling" A bit of POV here.
 * 4) *"The group had intended to take some TIE fighters out," This is a bit vague. I'm assuming they're not actually planning on destroying the bombers, right? There are several kinds of "take out." One's the Mace Windu type of take out, where the object in question is utterly destroyed. One's the Aayla Secura kind of take out, or rather, which rabid fanboys wish they could have an opportunity to do. Then there's "take out" as in joyride. Or Chinese takeout. So many choices. :-P
 * 5) *Do we want to know how we got the crystal un-swallowed? :-P I think not. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:38, 24 January 2009 (UTC)

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Krag (Zorbian)

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 12:48, 4 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The Ewoks line also had a very gay pirate...

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 * 1) He was really an uncommon villain. When he said "and such a pretty one at that" (about Princess Kneesaa a Jari Kintaka), we can't assure if he was on envy or having a crush on her. -- Delmar Nori 01:48, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) What is it with you, and, ah, pirates? Reddjak and now Krag? :P  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:57, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Cull Tremayne 21:42, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * I think Krag only knew that Kneesaa was a very pretty girl, although her species wasn't a model of beauty (Ewoks were beautiful only for those who likes teddy bears or similar creatures). I think that's not envy. Wicket would become jealously, if had seen Krag stroking Kneesaa's chin. -- Delmar Nori 01:49, 12 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Maybe Chirpa's ass was in the way or something. :P Thefourdotelipsis 22:54, 13 January 2009 (UTC)

T1-LB

 * Nominated by: Ajeanette 6 January 2009

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 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) *"T1-LB, nicknamed "Elbee" by Jedi Padawan Zayne Carrick, was a one of the LB-series bulk-loading droids in service for the Jedi Academy on the planet Taris." Could you add a date for this?
 * 3) *"However, Zayne Carrick survived the attack." Presumably, he was targeted then. This needs a bit more context.
 * 4) *"until his latest function for the Jedi Tower and Academy located on the planet Taris" Bad wording. Also, what was this function?
 * 5) *"At the time of the vision each of their Padawans wore a red suit while navigating by the Force to the camp leading the Masters to conclude that one of their own Padawans would bring about the return of the Sith and endanger the galaxy." Run on sentence here.
 * 6) *"go between" A little too colloquial
 * 7) *"decided that they would strike down their Padawans in response to the vision when he discovered that T1-LB had witnessed the entire scene." This is confusing. T1 witnessed the vision?
 * 8) *"one of the Padawans, who had escaped his Masters after they killed his four classmates and attempted to do the same to him" This wording could be a little better.
 * 9) *"Last Resort departed for the war front where Mandalorians and Republic forces were bogged down, but as supplies began to run low the fugitives raided a mining colony on the planet Vanquo" This is also a bit of a run on sentence, and should be rewritten.
 * 10) *"but in order for T1-LB to perform any command his companions often had to employ reverse psychology or references to Lucien Draay" This would go better in P&T, which I see you already have. Perhaps expand on that a bit.
 * 11) *"Then Camper directed the starship towards Jarael's location" Awkward wording.
 * 12) *When Jarael reached the droid" Can you rephrase this?
 * 13) *That's it.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:10, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

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Telos IV

 * Nominated by: Cylka  -talk- 23:31, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nom. On advice from Graestan...

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 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:34, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Nice job. NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 23:18, 8 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 17:25, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) A couple of noodles from the Pasta Bowl:
 * 2) * "Telos once possessed an enormous planet-wide polar irrigation system, one that rivaled Coruscant's own." Seems POV-ish. I do not recall anything in TSL that says it rivaled Coruscant.
 * 3) **Bao-Dur does comment on it being "like the one on Coruscant". The sentence has been so amended.
 * 4) ***Fair enough, but "very" was removed, as that is PoV-ish.
 * 5) * I believe, although I could be incorrect, but the history section needs GameLS and Endgame for the portions pertaining to the Exile's mission on Telos.
 * 6) **The template(s) have been added.
 * 7) * "The search for the ship led the Exile's group to an old military base&hellip;" Is there an article on the military base? I believe a link is needed, but I cannot seem to find the article.
 * 8) **There is an article. Link has been inserted.
 * 9) * When mentioning the arrival of Carth Onasi, I think it might be beneficial to mention there that he was a Telosian. It serves as a plot point for his motivation in the game.
 * 10) **Added.
 * 11) *Otherwise, nice article, Cylka.
 * 12) **Objections addressed.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 01:30, 19 January 2009 (UTC)

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Karazak Slaver's Cooperative

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 19:17, 10 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first FA nomination. Correct the article wherever is needed, please. Correct me wherever I need.

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 * 1) Hi Skippy. Could you expand the introduction of the article a bit more. Could you also add a couple of sentences to the Behind the scenes about when the KSC first appeared in canon, and later developments, etc. Also, could you remove the references in the intro paragraph, and, while keeping the various names in the intro, also place that information in the main body of the article as well. --Eyrezer 14:10, 11 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Done, done and done. Only the first sources and appearances are listed in BtS; I don't want to re-tell the list of sources and appearances in prose.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:16, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Cav's squadron briefing:
 * 4) *Acquisitions specialists were also used to define the potential value and risk of a specific person or small group, if a contract for them was possible. Not sure what you mean here - are they used to scout out potential targets already identified, or to find them and offer them for sale?
 * 5) **Canonically, only after a request. Changed.
 * 6) *The developer, maximum responsible of the operation, was to coordinate the plans with strike team leaders, and to give the final "go". Sometimes, the executive leadership of the Cooperative could differ the developer's judgement. These sentences appear to be missing a few words, or use the wrong ones in some places. Please revise to give some clarity.
 * 7) **Reworded it; I hope it's clearer now.
 * 8) *Any information of what the Slavers did with the subjects they bought off Thulaka?
 * 9) **No idea. The KSC might sell them or eat them for what I know. No changes to the article.
 * 10) *At least three teams - three teams of who or what?
 * 11) **Changed: Strike teams, as defined in the same article.
 * 12) *Check your source ref tags - the should come after punctuation, not before. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 19:12, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **Done except twice: Before a hyphen and before a closed parenthesis; in both cases I thought it would have been ambiguous otherwise. Tell me to change it and I will.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:30, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

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Daultay Dofine

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 13:40, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Read it again...for the first time.

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 * 1) Cull Tremayne 22:20, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  00:14, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:18, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * Digitally restored and remastered GA from an archival 2006 print. Thefourdotelipsis 13:40, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * I don't want to put this in oppose, so it's going here. :P Could you get a clearer version of Image:DofineGunrayTC.jpg?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:10, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Culator has now obliged with an HD replacement. Thefourdotelipsis 23:05, 18 January 2009 (UTC)

Lancer Brunou

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:01, 15 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: DarkStryder is back. Beware.

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 * 1) Cull Tremayne 17:27, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

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Horton Salm

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:19, 16 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Shock horror! Non-DarkStryder nom goodness!

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 * 1) From Graestan the Mighty:
 * 2) * Cav. Cav. Cav, Cav, Cav. You don't mention Y-wings in the intro whatsoever.
 * 3) **Grae. Grae, Grae, Grae, Grae. I do now.
 * 4) * It should be mentioned in the bio that Gray Squadron and Aggressor Wing flew S3s, and that Defender wing flew A4s (source for the A4s being Wedge's Gamble).
 * 5) **Mentions included.
 * 6) * Jake Farrell also flew on the Death Star run.
 * 7) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 8) * A mention of Commando Team One in the Brentaal section would be more than appropriate.
 * 9) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 10) * Second paragraph of "Initial raid" is a bit unwieldy.
 * 11) **Split into two paragraphs.
 * 12) * "Training commander" is an incredibly long section with one monster of a paragraph at the beginning. Please restructure.
 * 13) **Broken up, split into sections.
 * 14) * Same with the second paragraph of "The First Battle of Borleias."
 * 15) **Broken up into two paragraphs.
 * 16) *More later. Graestan ( Talk ) 06:02, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **I am awash with anticipation :P - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 13:28, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) *Context for the Redemption scenario.
 * 19) **Added.
 * 20) *Context for Home One.
 * 21) **Added.
 * 22) *You should mention that the pilots were kept in the dark as to Boreleias's location if you're to later mention that Horn found the location through Whistler's data.
 * 23) **Added.
 * 24) *Context for the Katana fleet.
 * 25) **Added. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 10:52, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) *That's all. Graestan ( Talk ) 03:56, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * Several of the internal links to the Battle of Brentaal IV article don't quite match up yet - they will do when I post my rewrite of that article in the next day or two. - Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 12:19, 16 January 2009 (UTC)

TIE/sh shuttle

 * Nomination by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:03, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Got it over 1,000 words.

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 * 1) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 22:05, 17 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) No problem with this when it was up for GA. Cull Tremayne 09:48, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) I visit this page after getting bored with GAN, and this is what I end up with. 10:43, 18 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:48, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 11:38, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Graestan ( Talk ) 04:40, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *"As an alternative to passengers, the shuttle could hold one metric ton of cargo, and contained consumables for two days." Not relevant to description.
 * 3) **Why not? That section is intended to provide an overlay of the entire ship class and its specifications. Is there someplace else in the article you would like me to stick this? I include it because I don't believe in leaving information respective to the infobox. And if you're going to object to this, you might just hate Executor. :P Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:41, 24 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *"essentially a TIE bomber without the bomb-chute" This is not self-sourcing and doesn't appear to be from ESB.
 * 5) **My bad. It's sourced directly to the Databank, just a reference error on my part. Fixed. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:41, 24 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Not sure on the whole ambiguous thing. Seems like OR to me, but my more knowledgeable colleagues appear to have no problem with it, so I will defer to their judgment. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:30, 24 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **I agree it's kind of iffy, but the ship in question is either a TIE boarding craft or TIE shuttle, and I went ahead made an editorial decision, which the CSWE seems to backup more or less, while making sure to explain my reasoning. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:41, 24 January 2009 (UTC)

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Sio Bibble

 * Nomination by: Thefourdotelipsis 10:18, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Old-school GA. Outrageously good.

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 * 1) Treacherous bubble!  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 11:24, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:52, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Farlstendoiro speaking. Does anybody copy?
 * 2) * Dren Melne is repeatedly called "Melene".
 * 3) * More context in the following:
 * 4) ** taken to Camp Four for "processing." What does "processing" mean exactly? If source does not specify, what about taken to Camp Four for something the Federation called, euphemistically, "processing"
 * 5) ***Removed processing altogether. Besides, I didn't like the "Four for". :P
 * 6) ** claiming that the death toll from the occupation was reaching "catastrophic" levels The death toll of whom? Naboo people? Soldiers? Civilians? Federation people? Both? Others? Who is dying? Why?
 * 7) ***We don't even know if that's true. It could have been a fabrication at Gunray's behest, it could be in earnest...I figure the way to play it safe is to use the exact wording, and stay vague.>
 * 8) ** helping Amidala present Nass with the Globe of Peace. What's the Globe of Peace and why are they presenting it to Nass? What about: helping Amidala present Nass with the Globe of Peace as a gesture of good faith and continued relations between the Naboo and the Gungans (if that's what they did)
 * 9) ***Again, I really don't know. I figure if people want to know about that, they'll click on the link. Plus, I think people will figure out enough from the name of the object. Thefourdotelipsis 11:34, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) *I don't usually vote FA because user votes don't hold any real value; but Sio's going to get my vote soon.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:51, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thanks for the review, Farl. Thefourdotelipsis 10:57, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

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Battle of Brentaal IV (Galactic Civil War)

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 14:18, 19 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Complimenting Horton Salm above, and Dar Keyis over on the GAN page.

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Mission to Prakith

 * Nomination by: —Tommy9281 [[Image:Dark Side Master TotG.jpg|17px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 04:26, 21 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Nomination comments: And so it is with this one as it has been with those that came before&hellip;minus the flowers ;)

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Visas Marr

 * Nomination by: Cylka  -talk- 01:04, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It appears that one can never move too quickly.

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 * 1) Good stuff, Cylka.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 02:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Sure, sure, win Round One, get a head start on Round 2 :P NaruHina  Talk [[Image:Anakinsolo.png|14px]] 03:20, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Why do I get the sense WP:KOTOR is gearing up for a WP:TOTJ-like run?  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  21:17, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Chack Attack:
 * 2) * "The Sith Lord Darth Nihilus, one of the leaders of the Sith Triumvirate, brought devastation to the world as well as the Jedi Order, killing all organic life, yet leaving Marr alive, albeit with damaged vision." Split this, and talk about the destruction of the Order more.
 * 3) **Split and elaborated.
 * 4) * Clarify that Nihilus is this foe when first mentioning him in the body.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * "Marr's first genuine encounter with the Exile left her disquieted. It had been some time since someone was concerned more for her well being than her physical state. She felt that the mercy the Exile showed not only towards her, but others as well, would serve as a weapon for her enemies. Nevertheless, impressed by the Exile's skills, Marr rediscovered hope and came to consider that perhaps the universe was not as her master had showed her, and that maybe with her help the Exile might be able to stop him. She found solace in the knowledge that her master did not understand nor see the Exile. But she cautioned that the Exile needed to understand why this was if she was to have a chance at defeating Nihilus. She refused to guide the Exile to him untested and without her potential realized, as she felt the Jedi was not yet ready to face such a threat and feared to lose her only hope. She foresaw that they would meet in the near future, however." This just seems a bit too flowery, and that it could be simplified a bit (moreso the second part of my objection).
 * 7) **It's been cut down a bit and simplified.
 * 8) * "Marr felt compelled to behold what lay beneath Nihilus's death mask in order to sever the last remaining bond between them." What was beneath it? "A man, nothing more" right?
 * 9) **Added that in.
 * 10) * At one point you pipelink Darth Traya to Kreia. I'd explain a liitle that Kreia was Traya.
 * 11) **Explanation added.
 * 12) * Intro exclusive info, when you say that she would help rebuild the Jedi Order.
 * 13) **It's in there now.
 * 14) * Context on Mira.
 * 15) **Added in.
 * 16) *Otherwise, it's excellent. Good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:32, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Addressed by Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 02:23, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

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Gjon

 * Nomination by:  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:46, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: More fun than a pillow fight!

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 * Just passed GA. 1,104 words.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:46, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

Arhul Hextrophon

 * Nomination by: Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:47, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Can't let his assistant upstage him.

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 * 1) Historians Anonymous.  Graestan ( Talk ) 06:17, 23 January 2009 (UTC)

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Jutka

 * Nomination by: Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 15:31, 23 January 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Inspired by the CWSE not realizing that a Tuhgri and a Human are different species. But, hey - it's DarkStryder!

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 * 1) Substance
 * 2) *Intro: "Tracking the signal, they discovered a damaged mining drone that Jutka hoped could be used to signal their homeworld, or attract rescuers to their plight." Who is "they"? Did you specify earlier who was in the escape pod? The whole crew of the ship? The pronoun doesn't give enough info IMO.
 * 3) *In the P&T: "Although initially wary of the FarStar crew, he was able to be diplomatic when he realized that they meant them no harm and convinced them to work together towards a common goal." Who is "them"? You go from Jutka being diplomatic then directly to the FarStar meaning "them" no harm? This whole sentence just gets confusing near the end. Could some of the pronouns be swapped in order to clarify who is working with who?
 * 4) *Is that all that can be said in the BtS? Aren't there non-canon RPG paths that can be elaborated upon? For example, is it possible for the FarStar crew to kill the Tughri during that first encounter when they appear hostile? A little elaboration about his use in the RPG might be worth it. Cull Tremayne 02:40, 24 January 2009 (UTC)

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