User talk:Clone Commander Lee

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 * Good catch on those minor characters from Traitor, but watch carefully the edits being made to your articles. Proper formatting is important. Articles need to be included in relevant categories, say, for example, Humans, Males, Slaves, and the Appearances need to be linked, italicized, and formatted. Here's hoping you stick around, learn the ropes, and help the Wook grow. Enochf 18:52, 16 October 2008 (UTC)

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Thank You. I do. --Clone Commander Lee 22:03, 3 January 2009 (UTC)

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Do not recreate pages that have been deleted. If you continue, you will be blocked from editing. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:32, 9 January 2009 (UTC)

Why have the unidentified pages from Duel of the Droids have been deleted ? I see no reason for it ! --Clone Commander Lee 19:34, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
 * There's no point in creating individual articles for every nameless, meaningless extra that we see. It serves no purpose and only clutters the wiki. By your reasoning there should be an article on every ewok, stormtrooper and jawa ever glimpsed in the Star Wars films. It just makes no encyclopedic sense. Gry Sarth 20:00, 9 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay but funnily the unidentified Aqualish technican page has been created again.--Clone Commander Lee 18:57, 17 February 2009 (UTC)

User Page
OK, I have to say, you've got the best user page ever. It's succinct, to the point, and elegantly understated. Quite refreshing! DolukTalk 19:57, 10 January 2009 (UTC)

Recent changes patroller
How can you become a recent changes patroller ? --Clone Commander Lee 18:05, 17 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Its a self-proclaimed title. If you make use of the Recent Changes/Latest Activity page/box a lot, then you can dub yourself this and put the userbox on your page.  &mdash;Lucius malfoy7  Nute777.png ( Give it up for Lil' 'Soka Tano, ladies and gents! ) 20:20, 20 April 2009 (UTC)

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 * Sorry but this page was complete useless. It wasn't deleted for 3 months and so it tried to delete it. This won't happen again. --Clone Commander Lee 17:44, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

Broadside
Hey Lee, I was wondering how Broadside is going. You said on the TCW project that you were going to work on the Broadeside (clone) article, but I saw that you have not editted on the article since the 18th of April. If you are still planning on working on the article, fell free to continue editting on Broadside or ask me or any of the other project members for advise if needed. If not, could you please then remove Broadside from the current individual projects list incase another user wants to take it as a project. Thanks. :) Kilson Likes PIE 21:03, 05 May 09 (UTC)


 * I've made some edits on this page today. If you want to do some more feel free to do so. --Clone Commander Lee 17:37, 6 May 2009 (UTC)

One month already
Hello to all the members of WookieeProject: The Clone Wars! Considering the project has just been launched, we've had a great first month, taking three articles to FA status and five articles to GA status. I would like to remind you to please try to do whatever you can to help out; there are still many potential articles that can be taken up as projects, and many of you are already working very hard on them. In the next month, we have a goal to double (if not multiply even more) our current FAs and GAs, because once Season Two starts airing, there will be a ton of more articles that will require attention, and it's best if we get as many as we can out of the way now. Thank you for contributing! Your project head,  CC7567  (talk) 20:20, 15 May 2009 (UTC)

GAN
First of all, you aren't allowed to vote for articles you nominate. Users used to be able to, but that was changed in a policy revamp. To nominate an article, start editing the GAN page and scroll all the way down to the bottom. You should see this:

That's the nomination template format. Copy it and paste it just above it so that it's at the bottom of the page when you hit the "Preview" button, and fill out the required fields (the article's name, and signing your name with ~ under "nominated by"). Optionally, you can post a comment for the nomination. Once you're ready, you can submit the page, and the article will be nominated.

Glancing through the article, there are several minor issues that should be corrected beforehand. I'll continue reviewing once the article is nominated on the GAN page, but for now, there should be no sourcing in the intro. Zak's birth is not referenceable to any source; everything except his birth has a source, and that's the Clone trooper Databank entry. Additionally, I recommend placing the article into Microsoft Word or a similar word processing program and running both a spelling check and a grammar check for the article. Please also make sure that the article adheres to both the Manual of Style and the Layout Guide.  CC7567  (talk) 07:08, 3 June 2009 (UTC)

The Gauntlet of Death
Can someone can help my with this project cause I only have the preview. --Clone Commander Lee 07:37, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * First of all, you might want to specifically ask someone on his or her talk page, because I'm not sure if others will see messages you put on your own talk page. Second, if you don't have the necessary materials, you might just not be able to complete it. In taking up projects, we assume that you have all the materials necessary to complete it.  CC7567  (talk) 16:02, 3 June 2009 (UTC)

RE: Zak (clone)
Hey Lee, in the future, when you have addressed objections on one of your noms, please leave a message on the actual nomination page itself. For examples of what I mean, just take a look at some of the other Good article noms. Most of the time, people put "Addressed", or "fixed", under each objection separately, so that it is easier for the reviewer&mdash;and the nominator&mdash;to keep track of what the nominator has and hasn't fixed. Thanks! :) Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jujiggum ) 14:02, 6 June 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm going to go ahead and take the liberty of clarifying the "bold" comment that CC7567 is objecting to on the GAN page since the bold sentence was my addition to begin with. Just wanted to give you the heads up. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 00:08, 12 July 2009 (UTC)

Your GAN articles
Hey Commander Lee, just so you know, you can add WP:GAN to your watch page to check in on your nominated articles. I listed quite a few objections in your Rugor Nass and Slammer noms, so you might want to check up on those when you have time. :)  JangFett  Talk 18:26, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

IRC
Please come on IRC and join #WP:TCW when you can. If you need help, don't hesitate to ask.  CC7567  (talk) 23:05, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
 * For now, I would advise requesting an AC removal vote for Slammer. The article isn't sourced, needs to be expanded, and needs to comply with all other GA policies before it should be nominated. Please contact me with your thoughts.  CC7567  (talk) 04:11, 12 June 2009 (UTC)
 * The way we remove nominations is by starting a removal vote, and once there are three votes, a nomination can be removed. Also, the easiest way to join IRC is by going to Wikia's web gateway, selecting the channel you want to join and typing in your name.  CC7567  (talk) 19:05, 13 June 2009 (UTC)

Rugor Nass
Lee, I'd like to ask you if you're still intent on seeing Rugor Nass through its GAN process. As it stands, there are a lot of objections that still need to be fixed, and I feel that it would be better for you to learn what's expected of a Good article with Zak, as his article is much shorter and easier to do. In any case, if Nass doesn't see any work by next Wednesday, he will have to be removed under our policy of a three-week inactivity or failure to address objections. If you still have the intent to work on him, please let myself or an AC member know as soon as possible. Thank you.  CC7567  (talk) 22:51, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

WP:TCW again
Hey Clone Commander Lee. As project head for WP:TCW, I'm trying to get a better idea of who's still interested in participating in our project. If you're still interested in participating, please leave a note on my talk page or contact me in IRC. If you do not respond within a week, I will assume that you are no longer interested in participating. That doesn't mean that your name will be removed from the "Participants" list, but it means that any of your current projects will be removed from the project page so that others have a chance to work on them. Likewise, if you currently have any projects under your belt, I highly encourage you to review them, and if you don't plan on working on them within the next two or three weeks, I recommend reconsidering them. Thanks. Your project head,  CC7567  (talk) 05:48, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Lee, do you really feel that you can take on Broadside, Matchstick, Jek, and Rys when you haven't even passed a Good article yet? I would seriously recommend considering holding off on them and trying to pass Zak first so that you know what to expect when writing.  CC7567  (talk) 18:47, 4 July 2009 (UTC)

Re: Rescue on the Tranquility
The two that were "killed" by Ventress later got back up. They were only knocked out.  CC7567  (talk) 19:23, 9 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nevermind; I made a mistake. The ones that she deflected shots at were the other two that were killed.  CC7567  (talk) 19:38, 9 July 2009 (UTC)

Re: Broadside
I don't have the time to review it now, but I would recommend looking through the MOS and LG yourself. Also, none of your sourcing is working. Furthermore, are you sure that all my objections for Zak are addressed? I haven't taken another look at it yet, but I'm not going to review Broadside if there are still objections remaining for Zak. Furthermore, I'm going to waste my time if I have to object to the same things on both articles, so please make sure both are ready before I look at either.  CC7567  (talk) 17:51, 10 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Lee, I'm simply going to ask you to stop taking up so many WP:TCW projects until you can show that you can pass one GA. Unless you are extremely confident that you can do eight articles in two weeks (that's the set deadline for all current projects, and you haven't worked on Gobi Glie for months) without even having passed a single GA or knowing what's expected of one, I would highly advise that you reconsider. If you're just reserving them because you're worried that others will take them, they most likely won't.  CC7567  (talk) 18:04, 11 July 2009 (UTC)
 * If you plan on cutting down on your projects, please remove the ones that you no longer immediately plan to work on from the project page. Thank you.  CC7567  (talk) 18:41, 11 July 2009 (UTC)

Broadside
Lee, I'll give it a copyedit once you're done. I went in and corrected your references and sources.  JangFett  Talk 18:26, 10 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 18:47, 10 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 13:41, 11 July 2009 (UTC) Okay. First thing, make sure you expand the intro. I corrected quite a lot of grammatical errors, and tense issues. I saw issues with underlinking. Also, if I recall, only Skywalker and Tano went to the facility to get the Y-wings. Broadside joined Skywalker, Yularen, and Koon inside the Resolute. You don't need to much information from Procedure as well, try to cut down the content, only mention if it is related to Broadside. Read this: "Skywalker concluded, cause Ryndellia was near to Naboo, that Grievous next attack aim was the Kaliida Shoals Medical Center." Improper English. Try to go back and correct some of these issues, they're quite a few of them. Overall, this article needs a lot of work before I can give it a proper copyedit. If you need help, I'll be on IRC channel #WP:TCW most of the day today.  JangFett  Talk 15:42, 12 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 18:41, 12 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 19:08, 13 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 19:14, 13 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 19:17, 13 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 19:22, 13 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 19:39, 13 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Once you're done, you can send me a message/reply to this. The tag is still on Broadside, so I don't want to begin editing it.<span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * I'll take a look at it later on today. :) <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Please, if you have time, login into IRC channel #WP:TCW. I need to discuss issues regarding Broadside, and it's better than spamming your talk page :) <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Try, it's Wikia's IRC channel gateway. Click the dropdown and find #WP:TCW. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * What error does it say? <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Have you ever logged into IRC before? I'm not sure if freenode is down, or if your firewall is blocking the connection. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * I'm talking about have you ever been on IRC before in the past. Is this error new to you? <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * It is a possibility that your firewall is blocking your connection, or if you using a wireless connection, it has a weak signal and cannot connect to freenode.  JangFett  Talk 19:10, 16 July 2009 (UTC)

Re: Wolffe
Sorry; I didn't realize that you had already taken him. But next time, please try to make sure that you cross out your projects in the master lists so that others know what's been taken.  CC7567  (talk) 18:19, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Whoever archived your nom must have forgotten to do so. In any case, it's too late now for the notice, but congratulations. :)  CC7567  (talk) 18:32, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
 * If you're the one who took it to Good status, then yes, you can.  CC7567  (talk) 18:35, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

Re:
Zak (clone). It is listed as a good article, and possibly the AC forgot to message you the successful GA nom template.  JangFett  Talk 18:54, 19 July 2009 (UTC)

More Broadside
Hey Lee, since you cannot login to IRC, I'll explain what needs to be done for Broadside. I'll continue after you nominate it. Actually, Lee I would like to check this article again before you nominate it. :)  JangFett  Talk 19:11, 19 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Expand the intro
 * 2) Intro- "After going throught the Balmorran Run, Shadow Squadron engaged the Malevolence and destroyed their ion cannons, forcing Grievous ship to retreat." Don't forget to check your spelling. Also, watch out for underlinking and overlinking issues. Yes, Shadow Squadron did engage the Malevolence, but Grievous did not retreat after they destroyed the warship's ion cannon. Malevolence must be in italics, same goes with any type of ship. (i.e Venator-class Star Destroyer)
 * 3) Bio- In the first paragraph, you need to source it. Also, their is no build up for Broadside's mission. Explain where Broadside served in the GAR, and his mission around 22 BBY.
 * 4) I see tense and minor grammatical errors throughout the article. Also, again, watch out for underlinking issues. Any time a new subject comes up, link it&mdash;but only if it hasn't been linked before in the article. You can link a subject in the intro, then link the subject again&mdash;only once though&mdash;in the bio too. Make sure you add context as well.
 * 5) Add quotes for the bio, and if you can, the P&T.
 * 6) Add another image in the bio, and move the current image in the bio near where Shadow Squadron took off for the Balmorra Run.
 * 7) Make sure your references are correct. Double check, and don't forget to reference "Kamino" in the infobox.
 * 8) Missing sources in the sources section.

> JangFett  Talk 18:10, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 18:28, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 18:32, 20 July 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 18:34, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * You must misunderstood me Lee, make sure you be careful of overlinking and underlinking in your articles. I went in and gave broadside a copyedit, and you did a good job getting all the information in. Make sure you add italics for ship names, such as, Twilight and Malevolence. Change "Forcing Grievous to retreat" in the intro. Grievous did not retreat after Skywalker and Shadow Squadron destroyed the Malevolence ' s ion cannons. Read the last sentence in his bio, which I added, that's correct. Overall good work, and also before you nomiante it, go back and add Plo Koon's part in the battle. I'll check your Senate commando article soon. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Keep the italics and the usage of linking in mind. For the intro, you can add more about Broadside's mission in The Clone Wars: Procedure. The intro needs to be proportional to the bio. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * All right, good work Lee :) I'll review the senate commando soon. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * Anytime Lee :) <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"

Unidentified Senate Commando captain
See my talk page for your images. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 00:47, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

Re:Broadside and Matchstick
I'll give Matchstick a copyedit later on today. As for my objection for Broadside, I'll strike it out. I'm still planning on giving Broadside another review.  JangFett  Talk 16:30, 23 July 2009 (UTC)

Projects
Lee, I'm simply going to ask you again to make sure that you are one hundred percent confident that you articles are ready to pass the GAN process before you start running off and working on other projects. A lot of them have the same issue of a lack of proofreading, and until you can be consistent, there aren't going to be a lot of people (particularly, myself and the other ACs) who are willing to object to the same things on all of your nominations.  CC7567  (talk) 18:38, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Lee, I hope you understand that I'm both asking you to proofread more and slow down before nominating anything else right now. Thank you.  CC7567  (talk) 15:37, 24 July 2009 (UTC)

As you're a part of the WookieeProject The Clone Wars, I think that you should cross those articles that you have chose, as the rules of the project requires this. I noticed at least one missing crossing here (the Unidentified Senate Commando captain). I could do it myself, but I feel that it's your duty, and I also wanted that you remember it in future, and check the other project of you, and cross them if necessary. Thank you for your time.--Kreivi Wolter 20:37, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * I'll give your articles a copyedit Lee, but I strongly recommend that you proofread your articles before you nominate them. I'll take care of Matchstick first, since I did say I was going to give it a copyedit a few days ago.  JangFett  Talk 16:51, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Yes, sorry, I was caught up in my noms, as well as reviewing others. I stroke out my last objection for Broadside.  JangFett  Talk 17:58, 26 July 2009 (UTC)

Re: Broadside
Well, since Broadside isn't called by the name since the departure from the Resolute, one can say that the battle had little to do with him. But I say that we know for sure that he was present and must describe everything that happens to him. Right now, however, this isn't the main problem. Lee, the article seriously suffers on basics such as grammar and linking: it just doesn't read like a good prose. I'll give it another look soon and once all major grammar points are fixed, we could go back to the actual content.  Mauser  Comlink 18:28, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Lee, I'm not going to help you on Broadside until you can prove to me that you're committed to working on his article. If you're going to be working on ten projects at once (and that includes Barb Mentir), I have no way of knowing what your level of commitment is. My perpetual advice to you is to halt your other projects and show me that you are fully committed to your current projects once I put up objections.  CC7567  (talk) 19:18, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

Broadside objection
The objection has been stricken, but as I said, please remember to take care of such things before you nominate an article. Darth Trayus  ( Trayus Academy ) 20:39, 27 July 2009 (UTC)

Broadside (again)
Lee, I'm sorry for the way I acted earlier, but the fact of the matter is that I'm asking you to halt your other projects after I review Broadside. If you're going to continue writing multiple articles at once still without knowing what is expected of a GAN, chances are that a) the same objections will have to be made for every single article and therefore require a rewrite on your part, or b) someone will have to copyedit each one. While the latter usually is not a problem, I would prefer if you learn all you can before working on other projects. If your concern is that you're not a native English speaker, then going through the nomination process first will help you improve it.  CC7567  (talk) 18:04, 28 July 2009 (UTC)

Re: Wooley
No, I did not forget about giving Wooley a second review. I'll get to it as soon as I can Lee :)  JangFett  Talk 16:17, 29 July 2009 (UTC)

Re: The Gauntlet of Death
Right now I'm only planning to promote the Battle of Rishi, so you are welcome to take the rest. As for the comic itself, there are plenty of places on the Internet where you can grab a scan of it. You just have to do some searching ;) QuiGonJinn  (Talk) 12:21, 30 July 2009 (UTC)

Re:CT-327
Sure Lee, I'll give it a copyedit. Have you looked it over and made sure you corrected grammatical errors?  JangFett  Talk 19:00, 30 July 2009 (UTC)

First look

 * 1) All right, first off expand the intro.
 * 2) "While checking a meteorite shower, droid commandos attacked the station and CT-327 was the first to be killed when he recognized the droids with a stun baton" This sentence is very confusing. I'll reword it, but Lee make sure in the future you read your work, even out loud if it helps you. I know English isn't your native language, but at least try :)
 * 3) Are you sure CT-327 was a rookie clone? While I remember the few inside the bunker were, I'm not so sure about 327.
 * 4) I expanded the P&T.
 * 5) After his death, is the rest really relevant to him? While it's fine that you mentioned the back story of the Rookies, the rest of the Rishi moon mission is irreverent.
 * 6) Overall, I corrected a lot of wording issues, minor grammatical issues, and linking. Remember to link new subjects that appear, and always double check your work.  JangFett  Talk 19:18, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Lee, you shouldn't copy from different articles. Even though it may sound correct; you should take notes from it, check the sources and then reword what you want to copy with your own words. While Stride is neither a GA or FA, you still shouldn't copy from other articles.  JangFett  Talk 19:25, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay, I'll take a look. Check the guide too Lee, make sure CT-327 is a rookie.  JangFett  Talk 19:34, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * While I'm not too sure, try asking CC for suggestions. I know that you cannot keep calling him "rookie" in the article, if it is not confirmed. The article is currently based around the fact that he is a rookie clone, but it could be a assumption. The guide calls him a "Clone sentry", while the rest of the stationed clones were called "rookies" or "shinies".  JangFett  Talk 19:48, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * All right Lee, I'll take a look. I'll be going offline soon, and probably won't be able to give Bait a proper copyedit tomorrow because of my busy schedule. I'll try to give it one, but I can't make any promises.  JangFett  Talk 08:05, 1 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I gave it a quick glance copyedit, and right now the P&T still calls him inexperienced. I'll thoroughly review it tomorrow if I can.  JangFett  Talk 08:12, 1 August 2009 (UTC)

Re:Bait
Sure, but lee, I would concentrate on your current noms before you start nominating more.  JangFett  Talk 17:05, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * That happened to me when I began starting to write articles. A lot of people tend to nominate one article then go back and nominate more, and that's because they're use to the nomination process and know what to expect. Lee, you currently have one GA, and I'm not saying that's bad. But you should show the AC members, like CC, that you're capable of nominating articles and sticking with it. The majority of your current GANs have the same issues, i.e, grammatical issues, and that's something you need to correct before you start nominating more. While it is fine to let someone else give your articles a copyedit, you should also give it a copyedit during the writing process. You currently have over 10 projects and 4 of which are nominated for GA. Before you start nominating more, stay with the current noms that you have already.  JangFett  Talk 17:16, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * No problem Lee, and of course, I'll give Bait a copyedit soon.  JangFett  Talk 17:26, 31 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay Lee, a couple of problems.
 * 1) "While altering the appearance of the Delta-7B, Skywalker says to R2 that the damage must look as realistic as possible" Why is he changing the appearance of the Delta-7B, and what is his motive?
 * 2) "Skywalker's Jedi Padawan Ahsoka Tano reports that they're approaching the ice field on schedule" What ice field?
 * 3) "Tano reveals that she thinks that it is a dumb plan and the Separatists will never fall for it" What plan?
 * 4) I don't think Anakin called Ahsoka stupid in the comic :P I fixed that error
 * 5) " Skywalker then releases the fighter and some other trash out of the Twilight and into space." After I corrected this sentence, it shows the lack of build up. While you said this, later on, the batle droids say "Come out Jedi". Was Skywalker actually inside the fighter? Mention that eariler.
 * 6) You frequently use the word "cause", however the way you use it doesn't make sense in the sentence. "Cause" and "Because" are two separate words with different meanings.
 * 7) Again, lack of build up. You failed to mention that he brought a fake lightsaber instead of a real one. Also, was it truly "fake"? You mention that he uses it, so it is a real lightsaber but not his.
 * 8) * JangFett  Talk 16:03, 1 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: CT-327
If you can't find anything that explicitly states that he was a rookie, then chances are that he wasn't.  CC7567  (talk) 19:01, 31 July 2009 (UTC)

Re:
The reason why they're disappearing is because you need to close the  JangFett  Talk 18:40, 3 August 2009 (UTC)

Question Lee
Hey Lee, for a while I have been noticing that you copy everything from my userpage. Why is that? While it's fine that you're using tables and that border around the page, you shouldn't copy everything from my page.  JangFett  Talk 18:03, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Oh, okay. If you like, I'll help you out. If you want the same layout, but with different colors, please say what colors you like and I'll fix up your tables and that border. The Wookieevaction template is fine Lee, don't worry about that :)  JangFett  Talk 18:10, 4 August 2009 (UTC)
 * You mean your signature? Sure.
 * To make a custom signature is easy. First, create a subpage from your userpage. i.e, User:Clone Commander Lee/sig. Then if you know basic HTML, you can start by adding in custom fonts, colors, the size of your name; as well as small images. Then finally, go to your preferences and scroll down and check the box that reads "Custom signature". Above that, paste this: and then save. Your done! If you have any other questions such as knowing HTML, I'll help you out :)  JangFett  Talk 18:18, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: TCW online comics
That's really cool dude, thanks for joining the OOU mini-project. One thing though, Mauser might do Mouse Hunt soon, so if you're about to do it, make sure to ask him first. Kilson Likes PIE 22:44, 04 August 09 (UTC)
 * Yeah, in fact I'm doing Mouse Hunt right now, so please stay away from it. =)  Mauser  Comlink 22:50, 4 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: For you
Thanks Lee :) Here is something for you as well,  JangFett  Talk 18:19, 12 August 2009 (UTC)


 * Your grammar is improving, but before you submit any article changes, use the preview button to double check your work. As for my left over Broadside objections, I apologize and I'll strike the remaining out. For you signature problem, what do you need help with?  JangFett  Talk 18:34, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * My name is one word, JangFett. As for your signature, what colors do you want and I'll go head and modify your signature. Is your sig in a subpage? i.e, User:Clone Commander Lee/sig.  JangFett  Talk 18:56, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Okay Lee, here you go :) User:Clone Commander Lee/sig. Now, go to your Preferences and scroll down and check the box that reads "Custom signature". Above that, paste this: and then save.  JangFett  Talk 19:14, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Lee, go back and remove the tags in your preferences :P  JangFett  Talk 20:47, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * No Lee :P Here is what you do, without the "nowiki" tags, paste this in that custom sig box, also make sure the "Custom sig" check box is checked.  JangFett  Talk 21:22, 12 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Broadside
I know. I'll review it again tomorrow. QuiGonJinn (Talk) 18:50, 12 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Cause it's still relevant, that's why. No proof to the statement that the clones guarding the hangar were his superiors.  Mauser  Comlink 03:50, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
 * In TCW the clone troopers have armor of all possible colors and yellow armor alone does not indicate a superior officer. Also, Broadside never confronted that clone, Matchstick did.  Mauser  Comlink 09:31, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I'd say yes, as he never even talked to that clone.  Mauser  Comlink 09:38, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Thanks
No problem Lee.  JangFett  Talk 19:56, 15 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Niner
If the GA list, random GA list doesn't show Niner then I can't do anything about that Lee. You should ask an AC member and I'm sure they will add him in. :)  JangFett  Talk 15:20, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Battle of Gwori
Im still working on it but i need all the help i can get --Jedijake123 18:07, 16 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Picture from graphic novels
Ill upload a image for the prelude and battle. As for Tracer, I'll upload an image of him as well.  JangFett  Talk 15:31, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Wooley
I will give him another review when I have the time. As for the Unidentified Senate Commando, it was most likely because whoever was archiving it forgot again. Also, unless you cannot read the notice second from the top on my talk page, please stop leaving me messages regarding ongoing nominations. That's what the GAN page is for.  CC7567  (talk) 18:31, 17 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: The Gauntlet of Death
The image which I used in the article was taken from a scan of the comic. If you need any images from it, I can upload them too. As for Gwarrk, here are my initial concerns:
 * 1) *First of all, split both the intro and the biography into at least two paragraphs. Such giant blocks of texts look unsightly.
 * 2) *Intro:When Geonosian forces invaded Rishi in order to get the exonium on the planet to power their sonic weapons. What happened when they invaded Rishi? Without the second part, this sentence doesn't make a lot of sense.
 * 3) *You need to contexify exonium. Say that it was a mineral.
 * 4) *The clones were ordered not to attack until their Jedi General arrived, but Gwarrk ordered the clone commander to attack.
 * 5) **What clones? The previous sentence doesn't mention any clones, only a task force, which doesn't necessarily consist of clone troopers.
 * 6) **"Ordered to attack" is repetitive.
 * 7) *As far as I know, "delibered" is not a word. Please change it.
 * 8) *You can't just link Cooker as "the sharpshooter", you need to spell his name. Try something like "the sharpshooter called 2242"
 * 9) *Fisto ordered the sharpshooter to aim at his shoulder, because he could not deflect the shoots of the Geonosian sonic weapons and he could deflect the clones shoots at them. This one really needs rewording. It reads awkwardly and is not clear as to who you are talking about in the second part of the sentence.
 * 10) *So, Fisto managed to weaken the Geonosian defenses. "So" is rather colloquial here. Change it to "eventually" or something else.
 * 11) *Currently, the flow of events in the intro is very unclear. You say that Fisto ordered Cooker to aim for his shoulder and then you say that Fisto managed to weaken the Geonosian defenses. What happened in between those events?
 * 12) *Biography. A male Rishii, Gwarrk was a chieftain during the Clone Wars. Whose chieftain?
 * 13) *Geonosian forces allied with the Confederacy of Independent Systems invaded Rishi to power their sonic weapons with the exonium.... The Geonosians invaded Rishi to capture the exonium, so they could use it to power sonic weapons. Your wording is a bit unclear.
 * 14) *...the Jedi Council dispatched a company of clones... Again, don't link Green Company as company. If the company's name is known, you should use it.
 * 15) *Gwarrk stated that the Jedi had created the army for warfare and he did the clones in her purpose. The second part doesn't make sense.
 * 16) *The whole biography is too play by play. Reword it so that it was more from Gwarrk's point of view.
 * 17) *He caused the failure of the attack that the clone trooper were not good enough... This one is awkward. I'm quite sure that "caused" is not an appropriate word here.
 * 18) *Probably more to follow once you take care of these. Some tips: First. Don't use the word "cause" as a substitute for "because". "Cause" means "a reason". In the colloquial writing language, however, the short form " 'cause " is sometimes used, but it is written with an apostrophe and, as I already said, is colloquial. Second. Don't use the shortened forms of verbs in the articles, i.e. "could not" should be spelled fully and not to be shortened to "couldn't". It is OK to use the latter in conversation, but not in an encyclopedia article. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 13:06, 19 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) Second look
 * 20) *You should use "circa" or "around" 22 BBY, since the comic gives only the approximate date.
 * 21) *Do we really need a redlink for "task force"? I'd suggest replacing it with Green Company.
 * 22) *Now the second paragraph of the intro is too play by play. I understand that I asked you to give more context, but this is too much. All you need to say is that Fisto formulated a plan, reached the canyon and used his lightsaber to deflect Cooker's shots. Currently, it has some unnecessary detail and can be cut at least in half.
 * 23) *...the Jedi Council dispatched Green Company, a unit of clones, to retake the mines.... You haven't mentioned any mines prior to this. All you say is that Geonosians invaded the planet.
 * 24) *The Genosians, however, had prepared an ingenious defense and the attack was beaten back and the troopers recalled by the arriving Nautolan Jedi Kit Fisto. You establish here that it was Fisto who recalled the troops, and later talk about Gwarrk asking who did it. This is quite confusing, as the reader does not know that Fisto's arrival was a surprise for Gwarrk. I would suggest you to describe these events as they were seen from Gwarrk's point of view, i.e. remove the mention of Fisto from this sentence and introduce him when Gwarrk asks who gave the order.
 * 25) *The second paragraph of the bio has the same amount of unnecessary detail as the second paragraph of the intro. Don't talk about what Fisto ordered or planned, just describe what he did in 1-2 sentences. For example, the whole stuff about LR1K cannon can be removed entirely.
 * 26) *The introduction and the biography both end with the same sentence. Reword one of them so that they not looked identical.
 * 27) *I'll take a final look once you fix these. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 20:45, 19 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 28) Final round
 * 29) *Fisto then went to the entrance of the mines and Gwarrk asked the commander where the Jedi was. This doesn't flow very well. It is not clear that Fisto left without noticing Gwarrk.
 * 30) *Fisto's plan included that the sharpshooter, 2242 nicknamed Cooker, should aim at his shoulder and fire continuously and Fisto would deflect the shots at the Geonosians with his lightsaber. 2242 began to fire and Fisto deflected the shots at the Geonosians. I'd suggest to merge these sentences together and reword them a little. Again, don't tell what Fisto planned, just describe what he did.
 * 31) *He accounted the failure of the attack that the clone trooper were not good enough, instead of the better position of the enemy troops. "That the clone troopers were not good enough" doesn't quite work here.
 * 32) *The article looks much better now. In the future, pay more attention to the amount of detail not related to the character. Even if said character doesn't do much during the events you talk about, you still need try to keep the focus of the article on him as much as possible. Also, be sure to check the flow of each sentence. If one part of the sentence ends with the words "the exonium mines", the second part should talk about the mines and not about the exonium. As for Cooker, I'll upload a picture and review him later. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 11:58, 20 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Boost
Sure, I'll take a look at Boost Lee.  JangFett  Talk 17:50, 19 August 2009 (UTC)
 * All right Lee, before I continue, please lessen the pbp in that large paragraph that beings with "In the pod, Wolffe..." I added more information regarding the Battle of Abregado in the previous paragraph, also I rewrote the second paragraph of the intro. Please go back and fix up that large paragraph. I'll continue once you have done that.  JangFett  Talk 20:47, 19 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Battle of Orto Plutonia
Yes I do. The current article is in bad shape, and I'm rewriting it in my sandbox.  JangFett  Talk 15:19, 20 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Cutup
I have seen it but that was a long time ago. I don't exactly remember that line from the Decoded episode, and if you cannot source it, then remove it. Also Lee, for Tucker, go back and rewrite a few sentences within the battle. I am seeing an resemblance to Axe, and it is not professional to copy and paste others work into articles. You may have used Axe as a guidance, but copying word-from-word isn't going to help the Tucker article. I gave the article a first copyedit. I went back and linked a lot of unlinked subjects.  JangFett  Talk 15:26, 21 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I gave Cutup a copyedit, and I have a few suggestions for you Lee. Remember to identify any clone by its serial number, i.e., CC-2224. If the clone doesn't have one, then you can use its nickname. In the intro, per the Ultimate Battles visual guide, many of the listed clones have serial numbers. You should identify them first, then after you introduce them, add an em dash and write "nicknamed "Blah" and "Blah", respectively." If you only have one clone then you can add commas. i.e, CC-7567, nicknamed "Rex". However, if you have a smaller article like "Cutup, then you don't have to worry about introducing their nicknames. Hopes this helps Lee.  JangFett  Talk 15:39, 21 August 2009 (UTC)

Cooker
Ok, here goes. This time, I went ahead and corrected the mistakes that I've already noted with Gwarrk, particularly giant paragraphs, the uses of "cause" and "couldn't".
 * 1) Here are my objections:
 * 2) *...Green Company was dispatched to the planet and ordered not to attack until their Jedi General arrived... Why were they dispatched.
 * 3) * ...and he took position vis-a-vis the canyon... "vis-a-vis" is not really an appropriate word here.
 * 4) *Currently, the intro is too big compared to the rest of the article. I'd suggest you to remove the part about the LRK cannon.
 * 5) *In around 22 BBY, Geonosian forces invaded the planet Rishi and took control over the exonium mines on the planet, needed by the Geonosians to power their sonic weapons. This is one of the flow problems I've noted in the Gwarrk review. The way the sentence is written makes it sound as if Geonosians needed the planet itself to power their weapons.
 * 6) *The second paragraph of the biography is too play by play. Could you lessen the amount of "Fisto said this", "Cooker told that".
 * 7) *The last two sentences of the intro and the bio are identical.
 * 8) *In the P&T, mention that he liked to watch droids burn.
 * 9) *And that's it. Frankly, this article is in much better shape than Gwarrk initially was. However, please watch your grammar and spelling; I've corrected quite a few errors. Overall though, after you fix these objections, Cooker should be ready to go. Oh, and images are on the way, I did not forget about them. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:21, 21 August 2009 (UTC)

Re: Cutup
You're going to have to find someone else for both. I do not have access to either, and I did not watch the Decoded episode.  CC7567  (talk) 19:03, 22 August 2009 (UTC)

Tucker
I'm sorry to not get to Tucker. I have a busy schedule and I was trying to get to it last night, however, I couldn't. Although, I did take a quick glance at the article and I must say it still has a slight resemblance to Axe. The entire intro needs to be written. Not just a few sentences, the entire intro. His biography is good, I just have to point out a few specific sentences that need changing. Other than that, hopefully later on in the day, I'll give it another copyedit before I begin addressing objections (if necessary).  JangFett  Talk 11:31, 27 August 2009 (UTC)