Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jarael


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inqs/4 Users/9 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:56, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Red started off good, you completed it. FA. [[Image:The Death of Ki-Adi-Mundi.jpg|40px]]  Jediknight19bby  ( Jedi High Council Chambers! ) 17:43, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 3) They grow up so fast..- Redemption [[Image:Redemptionusersymbol.png|20px]] Talk 18:49, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) Redjetta 21:52, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) Thefourdotelipsis 22:43, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Consider this your present, Greyman. ;-)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:43, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 7)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 13:20, 11 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 8) Green Tentacle (Talk) 15:47, 11 August 2007 (UTC)
 * 9)  Chack Jadson  Talk  02:03, 12 August 2007 (UTC)

Object
 * From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * Intro: " armed with usually only her weapon of choice" There's something off with this and I wasn't sure how best to fix it.
 * Fixed.
 * Intro: "unknown species which many found interesting although she herself did not know of their origins." I'm not really sure on those last two clauses (italicized). Is there a particular significance to her elf-ears that I'm missing?
 * Fixed.
 * Where it says "and was thrown off"- was she thrown off by the voice in her head or by physically knocked off the person she was attacking? Clarify please.
 * Fixed.
 * What is an "office type world"? Clarify please.
 * Fixed.
 * What was the "one last disagreement with Zayne about?" Clarify please.
 * Fixed.
 * How can the grandmother be "ill and rested"? Clarify please.
 * Fixed.
 * Third paragraph of the prisoner section does not make much sense- does Adasca go into any more detail?
 * Fixed.
 * Reference errors.
 * Fixed.
 * Why did the Mandos think the Republic was attacking? Did Jarael have anything to do with that?
 * Fixed/expanded.
 * A little more detail on Arvan's rescue would be nice
 * Fixed/expanded.
 * Capitalization of "Masters" and "masters" should be checked throughout the article.
 * Fixed.
 * The "spells" Camper had are not explained, so the situation on Arkania doesn't make much sense.
 * Fixed/explained.
 * Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:57, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
 * I'll be all over these points tonight :) Jarael and I are going to have a little chat... Greyman ( Paratus ) 17:21, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
 * I fixed all of these points except the expansion regarding the rescue of Arvan. Hopefully I'll be able to get that done soon. Greyman ( Paratus ) 03:54, 10 August 2007 (UTC)
 * Expansion has been done on Arvan's rescue. If there are any more objections, I'll have to look at them when I get time since I'm signing off for a couple days now. Cheers, Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:38, 10 August 2007 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 16:03, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
 * A project of Red's from the beginning which he and I were recently able to get to GA. I believe we've cleared the way for it's FA nomination now. Greyman ( Paratus ) 15:56, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
 * I suppose it's inherently obvious she's female, even though it's not sourced. ;-) Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:57, 9 August 2007 (UTC)