Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Conquest of Drezzi


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Conquest of Drezzi

 * Nominated by: -- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 03:14, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:The new abuse filter works! :D

(1 ECs/4 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:12, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:01, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  15:28, January 8, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4)  &mdash;NAYAYEN is back!  20:45, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * 5) Good job.  Imperators II (Talk) 20:57, January 16, 2012 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) NaruHina
 * 2) * Ressia needs specific context as the Queen of Drezzi. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 06:52, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 3) **Done.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:59, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 4) Lee
 * 5) * A conquest was carried out by the Sith Empire on the planet Drezzi[1] prior to the Great Galactic War,[2] a galaxy-wide war fought between the Galactic Republic and the resurgent Sith Empire that began in the year 3,681 BBY. "A conquest was carried out" sounds meh to me. Can you change this.
 * 6) **Fixed.
 * 7) * Please tell us that the Queen and her children were spared.
 * 8) **It was already there.
 * 9) *Good work.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:51, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 10) **Thanks for the review.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:59, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 11) Exiled Jedi
 * 12) * It seems to me that you could place something in the other side of the combatants box. Something like "Unidentified opposing force (Drezzi)" would probably work. If this is okay, I think you should probably find some place for it in the body of the article. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  17:14, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 13) **Yeah, I was thinking about that when I nominated it. Sounds like a good idea, so added.
 * 14) * I think that you should mention the holoprojection that the Queen gave as a gift, since it was a result of the battle. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  17:16, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 15) **Added to the body. I didn't add it to the infobox since I don't think it was actually an outcome of the battle, per se.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:59, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 16) Imp
 * 17) * As with your GAN, you need to provide a specific reference from TOR using the TORCite template. --Imperialles 03:48, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 18) **As with the GAN, I added TEA instead.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 15:17, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 19) ***As with the GAN, you missed one. :P --Imperialles 20:02, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 20) Imperators II
 * 21) * Umm, why do you use the date 3,681 BBY considering it has nothing to do with the events of the novel? The article should be more precise and indicate that the conquest was carried out sometime before 3,954 BBY, the date in which Sechel told Scourge about the conquest. (Since there is no way the conquest could have happened after that date) (Same applies to your Ressa's husband GAN)  Imperators II (Talk) 18:16, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 22) **Changed.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 22:33, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
 * 23) * In the note on the date, you should explain how the date 3,954 BBY is derived, since the date is not openly mentioned in the novel. And it also should be explained how do you know the conquest took place prior to 3,954 BBY (for example, because it was mentioned in the past tense or something like that).  Imperators II (Talk) 10:57, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
 * 24) **Should be good.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 20:29, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * 25) *** Just source the date for KotOR, please.  Imperators II (Talk) 20:32, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * 26) ****Done.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 20:55, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * 27) Just one; Ressa's husband could probably be added as a casualty in the infobox.  &mdash;NAYAYEN  is back!  13:41, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
 * 28) *Done.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 20:29, January 16, 2012 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) While it is linguistically correct, "conquest" is indeed a noun, could you state the opening sentence differently? "A conquest was carried out..." sounds wierd. I'd suggest saying "...Drezzi was conquered..." NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 06:52, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
 * 2) *Yeah. It did sound kinda crappy. Changed with Lee's objection.&mdash; Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:59, January 2, 2012 (UTC)