Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Bey


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Wheee, Marvel! Nice read, Cull.  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:29, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) He's Greyman, and we approve this article.  Graestan ( Talk ) 06:41, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Han Solo is a wife beater...huh... Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:19, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:38, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Too bad he didn't appear in the Han Solo Trilogy. Havac 06:09, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * The intro becomes somewhat difficult to read with all of the "Alliance's." Reword some.
 * 3) **Not that I disagree with you, but this is gonna be difficult. I can't use "Rebels", since they specifically don't call each other that anymore. If I remove it entirely, the pronouns make it somewhat vague. Mind giving me a kick in the right direction? Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***I'm not so sure that you should not use Rebels still. As far as I can tell, during the time frame the intro covers, the Rebel Alliance had not yet reformed into the Alliance of Free Planets. Additionally, regardless of what they want to call themselves, they're still not really the true galactic government until they throw the Empire out of Coruscant. So by my account, they're still "rebelling." Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:07, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Rebels it is. Varied up some. Cull Tremayne 02:56, 17 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * This picture caption. Is this bloodstripe the Corellian bloodstripe? If so, link this: "Bey talks with Han Solo after winning the bloodstripe."
 * 7) **Hmmm, I was under the impression that we don't link in picture captions anymore. Correct me if I'm wrong. It is the Corellian bloodstripe though. Apparently I'm linking to the ship. Good catch. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***I've not heard anything to the effect of no linking in picture captions. I do so regularly in cases just as this. But, I believe it's more of a preference thing, so the linking is up to you. At any rate, I went in and specified in the caption and the article that it is the Corellian Bloodstripe. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:07, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Not true: "Since the Galactic Civil War had just ended,"
 * 10) **Reworded. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * You end two consecutive sentences with identical phrasing. Reword one of them: "before arriving on the planet."
 * 12) **Removed. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * "Building" becomes obtrusive here. Please reword: "As Bey and the rest of the travelers explored the building, Solo realized that the building"
 * 14) **Wow, that is sad on my part. Replaced. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * For the sake of casual readers, give a brief description of who these people are: "Lemo and Sanda"
 * 16) **Done. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * As well as this guy: "Barpotomous Drebble"
 * 18) **Ditto. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * The Alliance Fleet? If so, specify: "Bey stayed with the fleet"
 * 20) **Added. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Reword one of these hopes: "Calrissian's only hope was being brought inside the House of the Goddess in hopes"
 * 22) **Heh. Reworded. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * Unless this is some special IU axiom that I am unfamiliar with, if you're referring to the group as a whole, the apostrophe here is incorrectly placed. It should be "Godoans." Please fix this throughout the article: "the Godoan's"
 * 24) **Yes, yes. Temporary brain flatulence. Was there somewhere else that I made that mistake? Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) *** This should be Godoans': "he would open fire on the Godoan's capital city"
 * 26) * Same thing with the intro. It becomes uncomfortable reading so many "Alliance's" in such a short span: "and the Alliance prepared to evacuate. The Alliance Fleet readied itself to cover the evacuating Alliance personnel"
 * 27) **Is this the same objection as the first one? Or did you mean the "Nagai-Tof War" instead of "intro"? I reworded that sentence...still thinking of ways to cut down on its usage. Any help? Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) ***You got it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:07, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * Please reword "a lot." That's just lazy phrasing: "Bey remarked that he could forgive his brother a lot"
 * 30) **Heh. That's what I get for quoting the character. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * Specify what these other things are, or remove this phrasing: "Among other things"
 * 32) **Was referring to how the article is actually about Alien species, not Bey. In any case, it's removed. Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * Reword one of these mentions: "Bey had another mention in Abel G. Peña's online article, The Dark Forces Saga, which mentioned that..." Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:06, 15 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **Gah, I am doing that way too much. :-P Cull Tremayne 07:15, 16 February 2008 (UTC)
 * No Nagai affiliation in the infobox? Havac 05:09, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Added. Cull Tremayne 05:52, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * You can only gain the Corellian Bloodstripe, IIRC, if you're in the military. This ought to be noted. Havac 05:09, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Added. Cull Tremayne 05:52, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * "Heroic exploits" comes off a bit POV. As does "heroic deeds" in the P&T. Havac 05:09, 21 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Meh. Changed. Cull Tremayne 05:52, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 19:18, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Guess. Cull Tremayne 00:51, 14 February 2008 (UTC)