Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Attack on the Tangrene system


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Attack on the Tangrene system

 * Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:01, October 6, 2013 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: The end of the first of many branches of the war.

(4 ECs/0 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) I like to think the Tangrenese kicked some Vong butt before rolling over. Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 00:37, October 8, 2013 (UTC)
 * 2)  Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  03:22, October 28, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) Supreme Emperor (talk) 21:50, November 11, 2013 (UTC)
 * 4)  501st  dogma ( talk ) 22:41, November 12, 2013 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A Force User
 * 2) *I'm not sure I understand this objection. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:16, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) **Er, that's not an objection. That's my title. Or should I have said "Master of the Universe"? :P Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 22:24, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Oh the fact it was numbered threw me off XD woops. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:45, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 5) A Lot of repetition in the body sentence. Please cut it down.
 * 6) *Removed some of the repetition. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:16, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 7) **Great, thanks. Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 22:24, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 8) Context on hyperlane (even if just mentioning that it's nearby.  Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 19:53, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 9) *Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:16, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 10) Maybe this is nitpicking, but I presume the battle was not a year long. Instead, could you say "at one point between 26-26 ABY" or some such?  Corellian Premier Jedi symbol.svg Force will be with you always 22:24, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 11) *Sure thing. Ayrehead02 (talk) 22:45, October 7, 2013 (UTC)
 * 12) A Non-Force User
 * 13) * I think the Yuuzhan Vong war should be mentioned by name in the body, not pipelinked to.
 * 14) * 501st dogma ( talk ) 20:58, October 8, 2013 (UTC)
 * 15) **Changed Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:30, October 8, 2013 (UTC)
 * 16) ***How about some context on it? 501st  dogma ( talk ) 22:00, October 8, 2013 (UTC)
 * 17) ****Added. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:36, October 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 18) *****Try to change it up a bit. The multiple commas make it seem awkward. 501st  dogma ( talk ) 12:26, October 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 19) *****I think it looks a bit better now. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:49, October 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * 20) Exiled Jedi
 * 21) * It would be better if the second sentence did not use the word "attack" twice. -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  16:14, October 15, 2013 (UTC)
 * 22) **Changed. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:35, October 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 23) SE
 * 24) * Same as the Vandyne nom, if you don't mind. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:22, October 18, 2013 (UTC)
 * 25) **Done, but again changed slightly. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:35, October 25, 2013 (UTC)

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