Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Battle of Taris (Jedi Civil War)


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 * 1) As nominator.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:59, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Beautiful. --Squishy Vic (discussion) (contributions) 20:13, 6 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 12:06, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) I think Grae and Wood pounded out everything that I would have wanted fixed.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:44, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 17:14, 10 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:09, 13 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Greyman  @wikiajanitor ( Talk ) 00:43, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:42, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) Good contextualizing. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:56, 15 May 2008 (UTC)

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 * "The Sith fleet decimated the surface of Taris, killing billions its citizens, though the exact number of fatalities remained unknown." You shouldn't say billions of people were killed if there's no source for the number. The figure is also in the infobox. -LtNOWIS 18:08, 6 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Added a reference for the casualties in both the infobox and in the sentence you quote; also fixed the grammatical error.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 20:39, 6 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Guess I should've known that. Thanks. -LtNOWIS 02:23, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Grass clippings:
 * 2) * Image:Leviathan-blast-Taris.jpg has visible frame at bottom.
 * 3) **Snipped
 * 4) * Caption for Image:Ebonhawk-flee.jpg should not read "the Ebon Hawk&hellip;" as the ship is not in the picture.
 * 5) * The also-known-as in the intro doesn't seem necessary, as the latter is one aspect of the former.
 * 6) **Mowed down.
 * 7) * After careful evaluation, the intro should probably be rewritten in a few short paragraphs, with context given to most topics.
 * 8) **Introduction completely reseeded, replanted, and refertilized.
 * 9) * Bastila could use some context for her initial mention in the History.
 * 10) **Planted.
 * 11) * "Malak and Sith fighters from the Leviathan attacked the ship when it was dragged out of hyperspace and boarded it" – Please reword, clarifying what is doing what.
 * 12) **Reshaped.
 * 13) * Carth and Revan also need some setup in the History.
 * 14) **Planted.
 * 15) * The Upper City needs some establishment.
 * 16) **Sodded.
 * 17) * "After he successfully beat the times of all other opponents, Brejik, the leader of the Vulkars, retracted the prize, accusing the Beks of cheating." – Please clarify that it is Revan we speak of.
 * 18) **Cleared up.
 * 19) * The term "ecumenopolis" never appears in canon, hence I would like to see it used less on the wiki. Could its instances and links in this article be removed? I see its inclusion as a sort of mass-OR created by the fanbase.
 * 20) **Pulled up by the roots.
 * 21) * The Sith military base's offhand mention should probably be set up more.
 * 22) **Added a couple of rhododendrons.
 * 23) * Davik's position in regards to the planet and the organization should have a mention.
 * 24) **Planted.
 * 25) * Is it stated that the Ebon Hawk was Davik's flagship? I don't think it was. Unless stated specifically in the files, please exclude.
 * 26) **Indeed it is mentioned, by several folks. I don't have the exact quotes on me though.
 * 27) * Janice Nall needs some context.
 * 28) **Planted.
 * 29) * First paragraph of Aftermath is full of speculation. Please only state what is concrete.
 * 30) **Pruned.
 * 31) * Please mention just how far in the future from the battle 3 ABY is.
 * 32) **Wedged in.
 * 33) * Tense shifting in the BtS should be evened out.
 * 34) **Leveled out.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 21:32, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * Graestan ( Talk ) 04:38, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) From the Merciless Hammer of Toprawa:
 * 37) * I'm confused as to why we need to specify (Old Sith Wars) in the previous battle infobox field
 * 38) **Vaporized.
 * 39) ***Well if there's a reason to keep it, let me know. I'm just not sure why it's there.
 * 40) ****There isn't. It's gone.
 * 41) * The intro is far too overdone. I would estimate that two paragraphs should suffice rather than three. Please cut out the fat.
 * 42) **Fat trimmed.
 * 43) *** The second paragraph could still be condensed. The middle of it gets PBP around the Ebon Hawk details.
 * 44) ****Did a bit more clipping.
 * 45) * Please handle these issues and I will continue my copy-edit. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:37, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * Brief descriptor for this group, please: "With support from the Hidden Beks"
 * 47) **Added.
 * 48) * Brief desc. for Leviathan, please: "Malak ordered a large number of Sith fighters from the Leviathan"
 * 49) **Added.
 * 50) * You never introduce us to the fact that he apparently has the planet under his control. Need to specify this someplace, please: "Malak tightened his hold on the planet"
 * 51) **Ammended and introduced.
 * 52) *** This still doesn't exactly make sense to me. If he's tightening a hold on something, as in, he already holds it, something needs to be added preceding this to explain he held Taris. If he did not hold Taris, he can't be tightening a hold he doesn't have.
 * 53) ****Amended further.
 * 54) * Brief descriptor, please: "eventually won the favor of the Hidden Beks"
 * 55) **Added.
 * 56) * Please let me know if this [] is showing the Battle of Taris. If so, I've got another source for you, albeit not with any new info. Additionally, if this is showing the "Escape of the Ebon Hawk," I think it would be better to include this image rather than the tiny picture you have it being pursued by Sith fighters. It's hard to see that one. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:35, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 57) **It is not, so far as I can tell. The Sith capital ships are too busy pummeling the planet to pieces to pursue the Hawk.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 20:25, 14 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) * After reading through this article, I feel the intro doesn't do enough to cover the fact that the planet was virtually destroyed. Something should be added mentioning an orbital bombardment resulting in the deaths of billions, which is extremely notable. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:19, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 59) **Addendum added.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:35, 15 May 2008 (UTC)

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 * Building upon the work done by Master Aban Fiolli.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:59, 5 May 2008 (UTC)