Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 6) Per AgriCorps consensus, nominators are restricted to four nominations on the GAN page at any one time. Once one nomination is removed from the page as either successful or unsuccessful, another can be added.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;two of which must be AgriCorps votes&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 2 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Lens Reekeene

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:27, March 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A Rebel General to be used as a NPC in a RPG Campaign, and part of my own mini-project. Currently 1200 words, probably I'll try for a FAN later.

(0 ACs/0 Users/0 Total)
Support

Object
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * Context on "Flankers"
 * 3) **Added; OS says little about that.
 * 4) * In the intro, you vaguely explained how he became a prison of the Empire, but in the bio, it's not even mentioned. "Sartran was disbanded by the Galactic Empire and the mercenaries employed by the company were imprisoned under false charges of conspiracy. While in prison," The jump from "being disbanded by the Empire" to being in prison is rough.
 * 5) **Better?
 * 6) * "While in prison, Lens met engineer Mikka Reekeene, also a former employee of Sartran. Lens and Mikka Reekeene got married in jail." This sounds like Mikka was also in prison for whatever reason. Was he an engineer in prison or a worker in that prison?
 * 7) **You are right. Better?
 * 8) * Try to add subsections within the bio. It will be more, concisely organized and well formatted.
 * 9) **Better?
 * 10) ***Much; also, is their any relevant quotes? If not, then it's fine.
 * 11) * If Lens was free in 11 BBY, how could she have joined the Rebellion? It wasn't established until 2 BBY.
 * 12) **Right. Typo in my notes, corrected: She was released in 3 BBY and soon after that (apparently some months), she joined the Rebellion.
 * 13) *More to come. Also, please watch your linking. I'll look through the article once more.  JangFett  (Talk) 19:32, March 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **More linking, and thank you for your review. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:01, March 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) The Grand Master
 * 16) * Seeing some grammar issues throughout the article. This is getting old.
 * 17) **Try. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:34, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Better, but still seeing several mistakes; a couple examples: "Circa 0 ABY, Reekeene also led the Roughnecks in "Operation Retribution," which simultaneously damaged assets of the Empire, while the Alliance suffered the minimum damage." "Also around this time, General Reekeene joined her husband, Lazith'chika and Rebel Lieutenant Am Serro onboard their mobile headquarters&hellip" (<--comma usage; this currently grammatically implies that Lazith'chika and Rebel Lieutenant Am Serro were Reekeene's husband.) Also, please see my note below on the linking; it applies here as well. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:10, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ****Might be better. I hope I could find every one. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:24, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *****You only fixed the one example I left on your talk page. Some wording issues remain. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:44, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) ******General overwrite and complete copy-edit, even if those things rarely work. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:29, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) * Why is there a birth date given in the infobox but not in the intro and bio?
 * 23) **Added.
 * 24) * Why is there no dating of events in the intro?
 * 25) **Added.
 * 26) * "an Irregular group of Rebel soldiers." This makes it sound as if the soldiers themselves were irregular, i.e. they were strange beings. Please reword so that you actually say what an "Irregular" means in this case.
 * 27) **Changed.
 * 28) * Why is the quote given outside of any section? Currently, the section which you have the quote has no prose. Please move it.
 * 29) **Changed.
 * 30) * Does the OS say why Sartran was disbanded, or why the mercs were imprisoned under false charges?
 * 31) **Added.
 * 32) * "Later, Mikka Reekeene was released from jail, because of a management mistake." This grammatically says that it was a mistake for him to be released. Is that true?
 * 33) **Yes. Reworded.
 * 34) * "and her less political husband followed her." What exactly do you mean by "less political," and by "followed her" do you mean that he, too, joined the Alliance? This isn't very clear.
 * 35) **Changed.
 * 36) * 2nd paragraph of "origins" section needs to be reworded more to follow Lens' POV. The first couple sentences sound like the article's suddenly switched to one about Mikka.
 * 37) **Changed.
 * 38) * Page for the local moff? If there is none, please create and link.
 * 39) **Added.
 * 40) * Page for Green Squad's mission to Abonshee?
 * 41) **Stubbed.
 * 42) ***Quick question&mdash;was the mission successful, or is this known? Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:55, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) ****Added. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 19:25, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 44) * "None of the other officers objected anything to her." This doesn't make snese.
 * 45) **Removed.
 * 46) * Linking mistakes throughout. Please make sure not only that everything is linked, but also that everything is linked cleanly and properly.
 * 47) **I think I've found what you mean. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:27, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ***Still seeing some mistakes, inlcuding instances of underlinking. (Another hint for proper linking: refuelling is incorrect) Remember, when possible, please try to link things in the article if you can, as opposed to linking them in quotes; for instance, I'm sure you can work at least Alliance Intelligence and Godking into the article prose, even if you just pipelink. Also why do you have "limit of missions" linked to the page "23rd?" This makes absolutely no sense, especially sense you just got done saying that the limit of missions was 20. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:28, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 49) ****Underlinking: Try.
 * 50) *****You have not added any links other than the ones that were in the quotes. This remains. Again&mdash;normally this would fall under "sofixit," but the fact of the matter is, this is a consistent problem with your noms; please take the time to correct it. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:10, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 51) ******Again. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:24, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) *******You've only fixed the two examples I left on your talk page. This remains. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:44, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 53) ********Two more: Commanding officer and Alliance recruitment agent. I can't see anything else missing. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:29, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 54) ****Intel & Godking: Included in the prose.
 * 55) ****23rd: Survivors of 20 missions facing mandatory retirement were only a 23% of the agents, thus the nickname; article created but no change here.
 * 56) * "Fortunately, the Empire was outwitted." POV.
 * 57) **Removed.
 * 58) * "to reach a meeting with the Alliance commanding officers of the sector." What sector? Is this still the Fakir sector?
 * 59) **Yes. Added.
 * 60) * "keep them nervous" Keep who nervous? Also, lots of the wording in the P/T sounds like it may have been taken almost verbatim from the source. I am unfamiliar with the material, but please check and make sure you don't use the same words as the source.
 * 61) **Changed.
 * 62) ***What do you mean by making the Empire "feel unsure about the Roughnecks?" Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:55, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 63) ****Sorry: Insecure, not unsure. Changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 19:25, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 64) *****This still doesn't really make sense; how is she making the Empire "insecure?" Maybe something more along the lines of "she did her best to trouble/pester the Empire," or something of the sort? Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:35, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 65) ******Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:44, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 66) *******Grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:28, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 67) ********Now? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:35, March 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 68) * "tell others only what they needed to know." What others?
 * 69) **Changed.
 * 70) * Please check the format of the BTS quote. The source seems to be misformatted.
 * 71) **Changed.
 * 72) * "along with another Campaign" What other campaign? At least pipelink it.
 * 73) **Detailed.
 * 74) * Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 14:16, March 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 75) **Most done; still looking for the grammar part. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:21, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 76) One more for now: In the intro you say "Lens Reekeene was a female Human born in 54 BBY.", although it's the same in the first sentence of the bio. Mind rewording it?  JangFett  (Talk) 19:36, March 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 77) *Better? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:44, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 78) The Grand Master II
 * 79) * Nothing in the intro that isn't also in the body, please.
 * 80) **Changed --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 81) * Very stiff, choppy prose throughout the article.
 * 82) **Modified. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 83) ***Better, but for the first paragraph of the intro and the first paragraph of the bio this remains. See my edits to the second paragraph of the bio for an example of how to fix this. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:13, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 84) ****Have a look. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:37, April 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 85) *****Much better, but please check your grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:07, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 86) ******Reworded. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:02, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 87) * "The Reekeenes and Lazith'chika were the highest-ranking members of the Roughnecks. They briefed the squads and answered their questions. Once briefed for a mission, a member of the Roughnecks could not speak to anyone except the Reekeenes or Lazith'chika, as a security measure." This seems very randomly placed; it doesn't really follow or lead into the surrounding paragraphs.
 * 88) **Moved. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 89) * In the "Operation Retribution" section, there are some inappropriate uses of "would be." Remember, this is a future-tense phrase, and should only be used when you are explaining the formation of a plan of what is going to happen (like you do here: "The Roughnecks would simultaneously raid several Imperial targets"), and even then you should follow it up with what did happen.
 * 90) **Changed. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:08, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 91) *I'll continue with my review once you address these. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 18:45, April 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 92) * "Once Retribution was over, Reekeene sent the Long Shot to the planet Iyuta. The Empire had a communication center there and Reekeene wanted a listening device on it. Reekeene had a contact on Iyuta, but the Empire had already found, killed and replaced this person, as a part of a plot to follow the Rebel agents to their headquarters. However, the Empire was outwitted." The content of this is rather ambiguous. It cuts off rather short, leaving the reader confused. How was the Empire outwitted? In what was the Empire outwitted? Did Lens ever get the listening device on the planet? Also, please specify better why it was a big deal that the Empire killed and replaced Lens' contact. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:13, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 93) **More detail added, but OS only gives an overview of the adventure; individual Gamemasters are supposed to develop, complete and detail the given outlines. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:37, April 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 94) ***That's fine, but please check your grammar. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:07, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 95) ****Reworded. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:02, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 96) Attack of the Clone
 * 97) *Did she officially take "Reekeene" as her married name before being known simply as "Lens"? If so, that needs to be clarified in both the intro and body, because the article is currently leaves a lot of room for misinterpretation regarding the shift from Lens to Reekeene. Additionally, perhaps beginning the intro with "Lens Reekeene, originally named Lens before marrying" or something might help to clarify this issue.
 * 98) *"Once there, the Imperial asked for a rescue." A rescue from what/for whom?  CC7567  (talk) 20:35, April 30, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Thirsty Bantha

 * Nominated by: Imperialles 07:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Eh. --Imperialles 07:40, April 17, 2010 (UTC)

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support Object Comments
 * 1) After a short IRC review. -- 1358  (Talk) 08:08, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 02:25, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) We should consider creating WookieeProject: Drinking establishments. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:33, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Good read.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:24, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Duchess looks it over
 * 2) * When you say in the into, "lest something bad happen to Thirsty Bantha", what do you mean by that? What bad thing precisely was going to happen? Also, the entire article isn't sourced at all. In the "History" section, 4th paragragh, you say that "who demanded to be served mass amounts of drinks", did you mean "massive amounts of drinks"? Duchess Jade  Republic Emblem.svg (Completely Coruscanti) 23:27, April 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **The article only has one source, so does not need to be sourced. --Eyrezer 02:25, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Per Eyrezer. The game does not specify what bad thing would happen. The usage of mass is perfectly acceptable. --Imperialles 06:59, April 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Ah, I didn't know about that particular sourcing rule. Other than that, great job. Duchess Jade  Republic Emblem.svg (Completely Coruscanti) 18:13, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Farlstendoiro in the Star Wars, Star Wars Cantiiiina
 * 7) * "A fifteen day deadline" or "a fifteen-day deadline"?
 * 8) * Underlinking: Credits, Gamorrean, maybe "helper droid" if it is some kind of specific technology.
 * 9) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:54, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Fifteen-day indeed. Credits is linked to once in the intro, once in the body. Linked to Gamorrean. Helper droid is not a specific technology. --Imperialles 08:04, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) Cylka:
 * 12) *fifteen-day deadline to cough up the money - Cough up is a bit colloquial.
 * 13) *Luckily for Robb - Luckily is a bit POV. If he was the one who thought himself lucky, then add that in.
 * 14) *In the Description section, you introduce Nia Adea and the reader isn't sure who she is. It might be better to avoid mentioning her in that section.
 * 15) *Unfortunately for Robb - Same thing, unfortunately is a bit POV.
 * 16) *I think that a little context for Wunda should be included. I'm assuming that he was the local crimelord, since the Hutts usually were. If I'm correct, that would be good to include, just to show that he was important.
 * 17) *After spending the entire day in the cantina, he left without paying. - This sentence regarding Wunda doesn't seem to connect the first part of the paragraph to the rest of the paragraph. Would it be possible to connect it to the next sentence by saying something like, Wunda's drinking binge didn't hurt the Thirsty Bantha's finances or something?
 * 18) *In the intro you mention that the Thirsty Bantha operated around the time of the Galactic Empire, that it was named after the bantha, and that Adea was Human, but not in the main body.
 * 19) *Interesting little cantina you picked to write about. Cylka  -talk- 21:29, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **I believe I have addressed your objections. Have a look. --Imperialles 21:42, April 22, 2010 (UTC)

Unidentified Jedi (Endar Spire)

 * Nominated by: NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:25, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: 331 words.

(0 ACs/5 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Identified vote (Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:59, April 21, 2010 (UTC))
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:47, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:33, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) As if this needed another normal user vote.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 18:18, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Ruthless Xero 05:12, May 2, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Unidentified Farlstendoiro (GAN page)
 * 2) * You can mention what caused the explosion of the wall - even if it is simply "the battle" or "a blast from an enemy ship" or anything.
 * 3) **Added.
 * 4) *GANom tag added. Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:37, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thank you. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 13:56, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Lee attacks
 * 7) * You give context on Revan and Ulgo twice. Remove one of it.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:51, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **Done. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Soresu remembers creating this article last year
 * 10) * Do we actually know that the duel was short? IIRC, they are already fighting by the time you open that door.
 * 11) **Crap, I thought I got that. Removed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) ***During the battle, she engaged a Sith aboard the vessel. She killed him during a lightsaber duel that followed though the wall section behind her exploded moments later, killing her. Chronologically, by the time you start that second sentence, the duel has already begun; there is no need for during a lightsaber duel that followed. The fact that it involved lightsabers could be moved into the previous sentence.
 * 13) ****Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) * Though she was victorious, eliminating the Sith, she was killed before Trask Ulgo and Revan, two crewmembers who had just entered the hallway, could speak with her. Moments after killing the Sith, the Spire took damage from the ongoing battle and the the wall she stood beside exploded. As Lee caught, Trask and Ulgo already have context. Also, you state the events of her death twice for some reason. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:01, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **I got rid of the first context, it doesn't really have to do with her. As for the latter part, I did that because the sentence would run-on otherwise. The first sentence says she died, the second says how. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:07, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ***This stands, again due to chronology. If you're going to state her death and the reason for it, please do it in one sentence. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:33, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) ****Alright. Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 22:12, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) *****Now the sentence is too long. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:42, April 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ******How about now? If it's still too long, the Revan/Ulgo mention doesn't neccisarily /have/ to be there. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:37, April 26, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) *******I tried my best to make it work. It isn't perfect, but I couldn't think of a better way to put it for some reason. Of course, you can edit it to fit your personal style. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 02:47, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) Just one issue, which caused me to strike my support of the article. The fact that Bandon was Malak's Shadow Hand should be sourced to the Knights of the Old Republic Campaign Guide.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:32, May 1, 2010 (UTC}
 * 22) *Good catch, Kasra. Fixed. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 16:33, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **Very good work.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:03, May 5, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * 1) I'm not absolutely certain about this, but I vaguely remember that this Jedi's appearance can change to another player portrait if you pick the original portrait for your player character. Could you check on that? JethLordMaster Ying yang copy.jpg (Xia Order) 21:50, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *You're right. Added to the article. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 00:20, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

CT-9/85

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:53, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Short one, a clone from The Cestus Deception

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support Object
 * 1)  NAYAYEN : TALK 12:51, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  JangFett  (Talk) 18:52, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * You mention Kenobi and Fisto's mission, but you never clarify on what the mission was about. Sentences like these: "Fisto and Kenobi were ultimately able to end their mission successfully." "in order to support a mission carried out by Jedi Masters Kit Fisto and Obi-Wan Kenobi on the planet's surface" Can get confusing.
 * 3) **That would be too much context. This guy just appears very briefly at one page and I don't think that this context should be in there.
 * 4) ***Regardless; a brief mention on what the mission was about would clarify the problem.
 * 5) ****Added it in the bio, but not in the intro. OK ?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:41, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *****If you mentioned that information bit in the bio, why wouldn't you mention it in the intro?
 * 7) ******OK, added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:30, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *Lee, please try to give your articles a copy-edit on your own. While it's fine to ask others to give it a look over, you should at least try, as it is your own article that you have written.  JangFett  (Talk) 20:54, April 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **I'll try to do this in the future, but normally I do it. Thanks for your review.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 17:39, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) The Grand Master
 * 11) * "After a clone trooper training session on Vandor-3, the Nexu was sent to Ord Cestus in order to support a mission of stopping the production of JK-13 security droids involving Jedi Masters Kit Fisto and Obi-Wan Kenobi." This sentence is worded poorly; whose mission this actually is, and exactly what they're doing is ambiguous. Do you mean Kenobi and Fisto were involved with the production of the droids?
 * 12) **Splitted and clarified.
 * 13) * "received a transmission from the planet from a clone who had accompanied Fisto and Kenobi" This is confusing, as you imply earlier that CT-9/85 had joined the Jedi. Please specify that this was one of the original clones to accompany the Jedi, and that CT-9/85 was in orbit (this will be easier once the above sentence is fixed).
 * 14) **See above.
 * 15) *No quotes? From what you say in the article, it sounds like CT-9/85 has some spoken lines. And perhaps could you also use Nate's order to CT-9/85 for orbital bombardment as a quote? Or maybe the Mon Calamari asking for the message?
 * 16) **There are two problems. First the quotes are not relevant to the characater and would be spare. And also I don't own the book in English so I would have to find a user who owns it. Suggestion ?
 * 17) ***The quotes are relevant to CT-9/85 if they are said directly to him. Also, not having an English copy directly available to you is not an excuse to not include quotes. Please see if you can find someone who owns this novel to help you out. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:47, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ****It was not an excuse just a statement. I asked CC.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:24, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) *****The point is that it is not acceptable to just leave quotes out when they are available, simply because you do not have access to the source. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:19, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) ******OK, I make it better next time. Added the quote (Thanks to CC).  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:24, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) * "Shortly afterward, the Nexu was dispatched to the Outer Rim world Ord Cestus in order to support a mission of stopping the production of JK-13 security droids carried out by Jedi Masters Kit Fisto and Obi-Wan Kenobi on the planet's surface." Same thing as for the first sentence I mentioned in the intro.
 * 22) **Fixed.
 * 23) * "on priority sequence and informed Admiral Baraka." Informed him of what?
 * 24) **Fixed.
 * 25) * "The Mon Calamari went to CT-9/85 and asked for the message that was contained in the signal." This is confusing: why did the Mon Calamari have to go anywhere to talk to CT-9/85 (i.e. was he elsewhere on the ship)? If so, please clarify that this was so. And do you actually mean he asked for the message? Or did he ask for CT-9/85 to play the message, or maybe to decode it, or to transmit it, or something else?
 * 26) **Fixed.
 * 27) *"should change coordinates for an orbital bombardment" Why would they have to change coordinates? Were they already going to bombard somewhere else?
 * 28) **Fixed.
 * 29) ***Please state sooner that the Nexu was already planning to go in for orbital bombardment. If they were already planning on bombarding somewhere else before CT-9/85 received the message, then please state that they were going to do so before you state that he received the signal. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 19:47, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ****Fixed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:24, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) *****Firstly, the sentence you added is not grammatically correct. Secondly, it does not address the objection. You say that if the ground forces were to run into trouble, then the Nexu was to initiate orbital bombardment&mdash;but you never actually specify that they did run into trouble, and that they did call the Nexu for orbital bombardment. If you do not specify this, then it does not make sense that the Nexu would have to change the coordinates for the bombardment, because the reader wouldn't know that they had already been called to bombard somewhere else to begin with. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 17:19, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) ******Adressed.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:24, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) * "able to end their mission successfully." Was it not also CT-9/85 and the other clones' mission as well?
 * 34) **Fixed.
 * 35) * How do you know he was obedient? Again, just because he obeyed one order once doesn't mean that he was notably obedient. Also, does the source actually say that he was particularly skilled at his job?
 * 36) **Fixed.
 * 37) * Also, could the inro be shortened just a bit? It's a bit too long as is.
 * 38) **Shortened.
 * 39) * Jonjedigrandmaster Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 21:27, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 40) **Thanks for your review.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:00, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

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Nal Kenuun

 * Nominated by: ToRsO bOy 01:48, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Nal Kenuun is a nasty Muun.

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Support
 * 1) Watch your verb tense, please, though.  CC7567  (talk) 21:10, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:25, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:14, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) *"Kenuun was taller and slimmer compared to most Muuns" Any reason this is in the bio and not the P&T?
 * 3) **I didn't know appearances were to be relegated to P&T. Added. ToRsO bOy 05:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *Could Grunta's death be mentioned sooner in the bio? Right now it seems like an afterthought.
 * 5) **Added. ToRsO bOy 05:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) *I would also suggest mentioning in the P&T that Kenuun saw beings such as Grunta as his own property.
 * 7) **Added. ToRsO bOy 05:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) *That's all. Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 23:40, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thanks for the review. ToRsO bOy 05:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Soresu
 * 11) * never failing to demand a replacement or a suitable payment be made in the instances in which his properties were destroyed. This seems to be contradicted by the destruction of Grunta's podracer.
 * 12) **There's a line near the end of the bio about Kenuun collecting the bounties on Solo and X-7 to replace the crashed podracer. ToRsO bOy 05:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 13) ***And that's why I don't review FANs: I start missing stuff I wouldn't otherwise. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:14, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) *Nice. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:26, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Much appreciated. ToRsO bOy 05:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Tumble bunny trainer

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 15:46, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Hmm.

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Support Object
 * 1) Wicket has bad taste. ~ SavageBob 01:57, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 00:24, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) I love you too, TBT.  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:18, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 01:25, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  JangFett  (Talk) 19:44, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) A Christian 23:01, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Floyd thinks this should be fun:
 * 2) * I think it merits a mention in the intro that Bright Tree Village was on Endor.
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) * Context on Bright Tree Fete in the intro, and again in the body.
 * 5) **I'm not sure what actual context I can give without saying "It was a fete." I think it's kinda self-explanatory.
 * 6) * Context on Wicket in the intro.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) *That's all.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 17:02, April 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) **Thank you for experiencing TBT. Thefourdotelipsis 00:13, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 11) * FIrst of all, how could I not comment on this nom? :) Just two things: First, can you include the original airdate for the episode and which season of Ewoks it was part of? This information should be in the Insider article you cite.
 * 12) **I think I've got that now.
 * 13) * Second of all, Leland Chee has stated that the Ewoks cartoons take place in 3 ABY (see here). Rather than the vague "in the Imperial era", you should update accordingly. Nice work. ~ SavageBob 22:19, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) **Got that too. Hope it's satisfactory. Welcome to the cleansing and somehow overwhelming experience that is TBT. Thefourdotelipsis 01:06, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) Please remove the usage of "unidentified" from the prose, as it is OOU. Other than that, fine work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 16:18, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) *Done. TBT loves you. Thefourdotelipsis 00:18, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) Is there a reason why ref tags 1 and 3 are the same? A Christian 22:49, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) *Big mistakey. Fixed now. May the power of TBT wash over you. Thefourdotelipsis 22:54, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) **Makes much more sense now :) A Christian 23:01, May 3, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * You might include a short paragraph presenting the evidence that the TBT was likely not native to Endor (as I do in, say, Lucksprite). But I'd say it's optional. ~ SavageBob 22:19, April 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * Good idea, but that might be more suited to the article about TBT's species, I think. Thefourdotelipsis 01:08, May 1, 2010 (UTC)

Eddel

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 13:00, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Classic WEG goodness

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Support
 * 1) ~ SavageBob 19:29, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Imperialles 22:45, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 01:32, May 2, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Three things:
 * 2) *Intro: "Having been prominent traders throughout the Trax sector under the Galactic Republic, they were decimated in a war against its successor, the Galactic Empire, and as a result, their number was reduced to a few thousand sentients, which were forced into slavery." A lot of commas here. Any way you can reword the sentence?
 * 3) *History: "a pleasant planet" Pleasant for who? This seems a little POV.
 * 4) *Eddel/Eddelians: If the singular form is Eddel, shouldn't that be used as the species' ethnonym instead of "Eddelian"? Examples from the article: "Eddelian starships, carrying Eddelian traders"; "Most Eddelian technology".
 * 5) *Other than that, good stuff. --Imperialles 19:38, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) **Changed the first two and discussed the third over IRC. --Eyrezer 22:39, May 1, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Lock (Eeth Koth)

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 10:25, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A clone each day keeps the doctor away. One TCW GAN should be on this page

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Support
 * 1) Good work, Lee. -- 1358  (Talk) 15:03, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Well done. I'd like to see more noms of this quality, Lee. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:25, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Airdate for Grievous Intrigue? --  1358  (Talk) 10:59, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 11:04, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) *Just to let you know, this is not a valid objection. It is completely up to the writer whether or not to put things like the airdates or release dates of sources in articles. The only time the realease/airdate would be needed is for articles about the source itself. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 14:47, May 2, 2010 (UTC)

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Mikoan

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 11:19, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A species from an ambiguous source. This actually has a nice tie in to the movies that I don't think we've seen before.

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Support
 * 1) Green Wroonians? ~ SavageBob 15:58, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 2) * "his own splinter faction" of what? That's it! ~ SavageBob 23:17, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Addressed. --Eyrezer 11:53, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Soresu
 * 5) *Only one from me: As turbolaser fire and concussion missiles rained on the Mikoans, they eventually sued for peace, As is synonymous with "while", and indicates that events occur at the same time. "Eventually" contradicts this. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 12:02, May 6, 2010 (UTC)

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X1's Executor-class Star Dreadnought

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 21:10, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Another SSD.

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Support
 * 1)  QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 18:22, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) -- 1358  (Talk) 18:22, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) QGJ
 * 2) * You may want to add in the "Commanders and crew" that there were a number of stormtroopers stationed aboard the ship, in addition to several autoturrets.
 * 3) * There was also an alarm system that reacted to blaster fire. It activated force fields and blocked all elevators until the situation on the level was resolved.
 * 4) *That's all. Good job. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 09:50, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) **All done. Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:02, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Eyrezer: is that infobox image just a generic image of the starship class or it is actually used in a source to depict X1's ship? If the former, it needs to be removed. --Eyrezer 22:47, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) *Elite Squadron uses that image to depict X1's dreadnought; I've already mentioned that in the BTS. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 00:06, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) **That is bizarre. Nonetheless, I will update the source information on the File itself. --Eyrezer 00:10, May 5, 2010 (UTC)

Theta-class T-1 vessel

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 23:28, May 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: More Bane stuff from me

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Support
 * 1) -- 1358  (Talk) 18:03, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:04, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Comments

OLR-4

 * Nominated by:  NAYAYEN : TALK 14:49, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A somewhat introspective OOM droid from Cloak of Deception.

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Support Object Comments
 * 1)  JangFett  (Talk) 23:00, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:10, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Just one: You say "The freighter was in the orbit of the Outer Rim planet Dorvalla, loading lommite ore that had been mined on the planet's surface." and then in the next sentence, you start the transition as: "Once carried into orbit". Seeing that you said the freighter was in orbit in the former sentence, the latter doesn't sound right. Please, clarify this.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:44, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Hopefully clarified. Thanks for pointing it out.  NAYAYEN : TALK 20:20, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) **Nice.  JangFett  (Talk) 23:00, May 4, 2010 (UTC)

CT-3423

 * Nominated by:  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:08, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Part one of my Execute Order 66 project

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Object Comments
 * 1) Fett
 * 2) * "While on a speeder patrol after the battle with Jedi Master Stass Allie, CC-8826 and CT-3423 received Order 66, which branded the Jedi as traitors to the Republic." They received Order 66? How could they "receive" it?
 * 3) **Clarified.
 * 4) * "CC-8826 and CT-3423 then opened fire on Allie's speeder, destroying it and killing the Human Jedi General" What did they use to fire on her? Assuming they used their BARC speeder's blaster cannons, correct? Please fix this in the bio, too, please.
 * 5) **Clarified.
 * 6) * "CT-3423 and Neyo made a BARC speeder patrol over the marshland battlefield," They made a BARC speeder patrol? Please clarify
 * 7) **What is not clear about this sentence.
 * 8) ***Nevermind, I took care of it during my copy-edit. "made" doesn't work there, Lee.
 * 9) * "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66" Again, how did he "receive" it?
 * 10) **Clarified.
 * 11) ***See the last objection.
 * 12) * "[...]and after informing CT-3423, both fell back" "Fell back" doesn't work here.
 * 13) **Replaced with a synonym.
 * 14) *"CT-3423 was ultimately loyal to the Republic and shot his Jedi General down on Saleucami." How was he "loyal"? Shooting down his Jedi General doesn't dignify that he was loyal.
 * 15) **Clarified.
 * 16) ***Still remains. Also, now "proven" is repetitive in this sentence. You changed "Republic" to "Empire," which is false.
 * 17) ****Changed back, fixed.
 * 18) *****I didn't say to change it back, Lee. Please reread what I said above.
 * 19) ******Fixed.
 * 20) *******I see no change.
 * 21) ********He was loyal enough to execute his Jedi General he had fought with. If that doesn't makes him loyal to the Republic, I don't know what.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:38, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *********You failed to mention that he was loyal to Palpatine's orders and executed the chancellor's demand of killing his Jedi General, because of Order 66.
 * 23) **********Added.
 * 24) *I'll give it another look after this.  JangFett  (Talk) 18:34, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 25) **Thanks.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:50, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) ***Lee, please take a look at the changes I've made during my second copy-edit.  JangFett  (Talk) 19:18, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) * "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66 over their helm comlinks" You say both clones received the order in the intro, now you say only Neyo received the order. Which one is correct? Note that you say "their," which doesn't make sense.
 * 28) **Actually, the use of "their" is correct. The comlinks belonged to them, so they received the order in "their" comlinks. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 22:51, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Jon, I meant that Lee said in the intro that both received the order, and then in the bio, only Neyo did. If both of them received it, then CT-3423 should be added in as well.  JangFett  (Talk) 22:54, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ****Ah, sorry, my mistake&mdash;I misinterpreted what you meant. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars )
 * 31) *****No problem. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 22:59, May 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) ******Not quite sure if both recieved the order. Neyo did it so I wrote that he recieved it.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:13, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) *"During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66 over his helm comlinks&mdash;an order for all clone troopers to execute their Jedi officers&mdash;from Supreme Chancellor Palpatine and, after informing CT-3423, both troopers utilized their speeder's blaster cannons to fire on Allie, hitting the rear of the Jedi's Aratech 74-Z speeder." Please take a look at this sentence, Lee. Not only is the context out of place here, but it's confusing. You can cut it down. Take a look at the intro's sentence to help you on this. But, please, paraphrase so it doesn't match the intro's. I've seen you do this quite a lot, Lee.
 * 34) **Removed the context on Palpy.
 * 35) ***I didn't say to remove it. Please reread what I said above.
 * 36) ****Splitted.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:14, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 37) *****I still see no change, Lee. Please read this sentence again, and read what I've said above: "During the speeder reconnaissance, Neyo received Order 66 over his helm comlinks&mdash;an order for all clone troopers to execute their Jedi officers&mdash; from Supreme Chancellor Palpatine."
 * 38) ******Fixed.
 * 39) *******You didn't fix anything, Lee.
 * 40) ********now.
 * 41) *"This ignited the reactor of the bike and sent it into a fatal crash," "Ignited" doesn't work here.
 * 42) **Replaced withactivated.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:33, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 43) ***Actually, the bike would be "activated" if its running. I would say something along the lines of the blaster fire caused the bike to explode. You don't have to describe every detail that you saw in ROTS. Just straight-to-the-point.
 * 44) ****eh, the info about the reactor is from TCSWE and it should be there.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:14, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) *****You failed to mention or source this in the article, then, Lee. If it's in the CSWE, then please source it. You currently have it sourced to Order 66 and ROTS, which assuming are correct, but given that you said it's mentioned in the CSWE, it should be sourced to it as well. The "reactor" bit only, though.  JangFett  (Talk) 16:26, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 46) ******Meh, it was Order 66.  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 16:38, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 47) *******Which one is correct, Lee? First off, you told me that the information was in CSWE, and now you say it's not there, but in Order 66. If it is Order 66, then please correct the reference in the article.  JangFett  (Talk) 16:42, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) ********It is correct as it is.

Gormak

 * Nominated by: &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 02:46, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first species nom. Looking forward to addressing your objections. Thanks in advance for your reviews!

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good job. --Imperialles 13:01, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Good to see project progress. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 22:48, May 5, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Few things:
 * 2) * Gormak in the galaxy: "For this reason, Gormak are generally considered to be mysterious." First of all, wrong tense. Secondly, considered mysterious by who? Clarify, or it could come off as a little POV.
 * 3) **Source text: A MYSTERIOUS SPECIES ON A MYSTERIOUS WORLD, LITTLE IS KNOWN IN THE GREATER GALAXY ABOUT THE GORMAK (sorry about caps, that's what it came in). I changed the article text to: For this reason, Gormak were considered to be mysterious to off-worlders. This fixes the tense issue and clarifies who holds the opinion without adding another use of "the galaxy". &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) * Gormak in the galaxy: "As the Gormak began constructing space-craft based on scavenged and stolen technology, it is possible that they expanded to planets other than Voss at a later time." Speculation.
 * 5) **Removed. Seemed obvious enough to include it, but then again if it's so obvious it does not need to be included. Also fixed the sourcing tags since that source only appears once after edit. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) * Image captions: Remember to use periods when writing full sentences.
 * 7) **Darn, thought I had that covered. Made some changes to throw verbs in the captions, making it more obvious they were sentences and safer to add periods all around. Should be fixed. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) * Wikipedia links: No hard rules on this, and this is not a proper objection, but it might not be a bad idea to cut down on these a bit. In the intro, flight could link to starship instead of being an interwiki link.
 * 9) **I originally had that but was concerned that they might not have atmospheric flight too. Did a double link to airspeeders and spacecraft there. Also removed some of the obvious links in the description: hair, fur, nose, claw. No reason why those should be linked when terms like "face" and "eyes" aren't. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) *Other than that, nice work. Just keep in mind that this article's going to need a ton of care in the months leading up to the release of TOR, and then likely a huge update once it's out. --Imperialles 05:14, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thanks! And thanks for the review! I'm aware that many articles in the project are going to need big work when the game is released, but I'm happy to do that. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) Trayus Academy:
 * 13) * I would change the main quote source to the actual HoloNet article instead of ours, so as to be more specific as to where in the HoloNet it came from.
 * 14) **Done! &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Err, not done. My edit didn't actually work as it required an in-house article. Changed back. If you know a way to get a more accurate link without creating an article for each section of the holonet or entry in the holonet, please let me know. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 13:45, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ***I've taken care of it for you. Give it a look so you can see how to do Quoteurl's in the future.
 * 17) **** Okay, that makes sense, but where is the [src] link? Does the "quoteurl" template not give a link for the source? &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 00:57, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) ****Nm. I looked up the template and you were just missing the "url=" portion. Added, and thanks for pointing the template out. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 01:00, May 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) * Slightly reduce some of the details on the Imperial/Republic invasion in the intro. One sentence should do it. It's specifics are somewhat unimportant to the Gormak.
 * 20) **I cut out some details of the Voss and I inserted the Gormak into another clause to make it more relevant to them: When the planet Voss was first discovered not long after the Treaty of Coruscant in 3,653 BBY, the Sith Empire attempted to conquer the planet, which it thought was only populated by Gormak. The Voss revealed themselves and the planet remained independent. Embassies were established by the Empire and the Galactic Republic in an attempt to curry favor with the Voss, angering the Gormak. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) ***Good. I made a slight alteration, but feel free to undo it if you don't like it.
 * 22) * "The Gormak were extremely hostile toward the other natives of the planet Voss, the Voss." - Although I understand what's being said here, others who have not read the original source may be a bit confused if you name the Voss without providing a better distinction between their name and the planet's.
 * 23) **I altered the text in that sentence to: toward the other natives of the planet, the Voss species. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Perfect
 * 25) * The final sentence of "Gormak in the galaxy" is speculation at this point.
 * 26) **Removed, as per Imp's objection. &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 27) *Other than that and Imp's objections, it looks pretty good. Like he said, it'll require a lot of updating, but it seems GA-worthy as it stands. And I'm glad you're taking on projects that you know will need updates, as it's best to get a head-start on them now instead of starting from scratch when a litany of information is released. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 05:48, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) **I'm aware that there's going to be updates and eventually a big flood of new information once the game is released. I'm up for that as long as it's not expected for all articles all at once. :) As you said, the more that's done now, the easier it will be later. Thanks for the review! &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 12:57, May 5, 2010 (UTC)

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 * Nominated by: Imperialles 16:25, May 5, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Warming up for Gamorr.

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