Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Shadow trooper


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Shadow trooper

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 12:03, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Whoever said that toys aren't canon? Plus...ARMAND.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Not as nominator!  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:06, 13 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Green Tentacle (Talk) 22:35, 28 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Vive advanced clone trooper types!  Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 08:53, 3 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:03, 5 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Lord Hydronium 10:05, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Clean as a whistle.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:56, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Moffship of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "In 19 BBY, when Confederacy of Independent Systems General Grievous was located on Utapau, shadow troopers were called in to infiltrate six of the planet's sinkhole cities, and place jammers, which would allow[1] General Obi-Wan Kenobi and the Third Systems Army to invade the planet without notice. As a result, Grievous was killed, and Utapau was placed under Galactic Republic control."[3][4] The first part (up to Grievous) reads awkwardly. Add something to indicate the Confederacy's relationship to Grievous. I realize general is there but it doesn't make it any smoother. Supreme Commander might work. Also, does the reference formatting have to be like that?
 * 3) **If there wasn't such a strong correlation between the words "General" and "Grievous" that probably would have read as intended, but I suppose it doesn't. Altered.
 * 4) * "In some situations, such as the on on Utapau in the waning days of the Clone Wars, shadow troopers were inserted to ensure the successful entry of a much larger invasion force." Is there supposed to be something between the and on?
 * 5) **Meant to be a "one." Fixed. Thefourdotelipsis 07:40, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) *Nice.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:45, 11 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) From the Merciless Hammer of Toprawa:
 * 8) * I'd like to see a little mention of it being selected as number 62 in Insider's 100 Best Things Ever and any appropriate info the description may include
 * 9) * I would request that you please create an article for Director of Republic Intelligence in accordance with our Director of Imperial Intelligence and Director of New Republic Intelligence articles and link both instances of "Director" to that article, rather than the mundane Director article.
 * 10) * Just used this "with ease" bit to end the first paragraph. A bit redundant, please reword: "allow their comrades to infiltrate their targets with stealth and ease"
 * 11) * Much of the "Application" section is very redundant, just repeating what you've already clearly established in the prior sections. I don't see anything in our Layout Guide that would necessarily stipulate such a section be included. As such, please cut out the unnecessary repetition. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:35, 5 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **May this set a precedent for other, longer articles of similar ilk that would do greater justice for such a section with more, original information. Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:03, 5 June 2008 (UTC)

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