Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Pablo-Jill


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

(5 Inq/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:58, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 23:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:55, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:42, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:23, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Another well-written article by Acky.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:14, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Addressed in IRC.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:25, 17 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 2) * Infobox image not exactly up to snuff on quality. Please substitute another or get a re-scan.
 * 3) **I've asked JMAS for a rescan. Only other real option is this, which looks a bit odd.
 * 4) ***I've done what I could to get an improved scan, and placed it in the article. The blasted image just seems to scan with some artifacts, and I don't think it's my scanner, I think it's the image. I did what I could for now with Photoshop to edit out the worst of the JPEG artifacts. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 23:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Still ten times better than what was there. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:55, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Set up who Grievous is a little in the intro.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * "Alongside Mirialan Jedi Padawan Barriss Offee, Pablo-Jill fought against thousands of battle droids in the arena; however, they were both soon separated from the rest of the Jedi, and had been left behind by the LAAT/i gunships led by Grand Master Yoda." – Iron out tense awkwardness.
 * 9) **Altered.
 * 10) * Give some context for the Battle of Coruscant.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) * Not so keen on referring to Fisto as "Jedi Councilor," as IU I haven't really seen the term.
 * 13) **Changed.
 * 14) * Explain Grievous's firing on innocents. Is there more info?
 * 15) **Not really. I've clarified a little, but there's nothing else to add.
 * 16) * Were the other senior Jedi really worried for their own safety?
 * 17) **Altered slightly.
 * 18) * Graestan ( Talk ) 23:30, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:03, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***No problem. Lovely article. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:50, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) Toprawa:
 * 22) * Pablo is my next review. For now, I've noticed reference number 10 is incorrectly formatted. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:13, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) **Done. It was a simple fix. It was marked LOE instead of LoE. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 01:34, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Thanks, JMAS. :)
 * 25) * Please link the CIS droid army page here: "battled the vast droid armies of the Confederacy of Independent Systems"
 * 26) **Nevermind that one. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:21, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Can we name these Jedi? I believe Shaak Ti was foremost among them: "and more skilled than the ones he had encountered when taking Palpatine"
 * 28) **While Shaak Ti was around, I think Grievous's thoughts were referring to the ones he killed (which I have listed), since Shaak Ti's supposed to be one of the best swordsbeings.
 * 29) * Two things here. Please elaborate a little bit more that it was a collection of lightsabers taken from the Jedi he had slain. Also, I would like to see mention of Grievous taking his saber in his biography section as well: "The cyborg added Pablo's lightsaber to his collection."
 * 30) **Added a mention plus description in the biography.
 * 31) * Can we get a 1stID tag on one of the appearances?
 * 32) **I doubt any of the current sources/appearances were the first to name him, though I'm not really sure what would have and how I might find it.
 * 33) ***Wouldn't AOTC be the 1st appearance? He wasn't named in it, but he clearly was, as one of the images from the article is a screenshot from the film. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 12:41, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **** is for first identified; AOTC is already listed as the . -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:27, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) *****I think I see what you're saying. It seems as thought he was named during production of Ep. II. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:42, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) ******This one had me curious. And I'm thinking the Databank update (Inside the Jedi Temple) made on June 21, 2002 was his first official ID as Pablo-Jill. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 17:59, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) *******Looks like it. Added to article. Thanks for that, JMAS, and for the image and the other objections you resolved. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:37, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) ********Happy to help. :) -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 18:40, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) *Excellent job of description and contextualizing. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:17, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) **Thank you. And thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:12, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 41) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 42) * "He was among the two hundred or so Jedi stationed in the Jedi Temple in 22 BBY when the Order received word that Obi-Wan Kenobi had been captured by the Confederacy of Independent Systems on Geonosis in the Outer Rim Territories after tracking the bounty hunter Jango Fett to the barren planet." I'm not sure "200 or so" is needed, given that you use it two other times.
 * 43) **Good spot. Fixed.
 * 44) * "They had been the closest to hitting the shuttle, but Grievous had managed to evade them by firing on local debris to shake off his trailers. Tiin, Kolar, and Pablo-Jill were firing on the shuttle incessantly, but Grievous's superior flying ability and the ship's strong shields meant they made little impact." The first sentence is a little confusing, and together these two read a little odd. A slight wording change might be good. Ask me for further clarification if you need it.
 * 45) **Clarified some.
 * 46) * Link Invisible Hand the first time it’s mentioned in the article.
 * 47) **Done, though it's not exactly something you couldn't do yourself.
 * 48) ***True, true.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:14, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) * Link Coleman Kcaj in the BTS.
 * 50) **Same as above.
 * 51) *Minor stuff, easy fixes.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 21:04, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) **Thanks for the review. 21:48, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 20:36, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Written some months ago for GA. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:58, 9 April 2008 (UTC)