Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Skytop Station


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Skytop Station

 * Nominated by: Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 07:58, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Goes with CC's Droid Retrieval project

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1)  CC7567  (talk) 22:22, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Kreivi Wolter 10:53, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 22:33, October 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Well done. Just added a link or two and the CIS category.  —Xwing328 (Talk) 16:48, October 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) --Eyrezer 00:07, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 13:58, November 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:10, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

Object > JangFett  Talk 19:23, 25 June 2009 (UTC) > JangFett  Talk 14:27, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Fett's 2 cents
 * 2) * Throughout the article, you say the group were going to target the repulsorlift generators. However in the episode, their target was the main reactor. The reactor was protected by the rayshield.
 * 3) **Okay, I see what you mean.
 * 4) * This may be a speculation but possibly the repulsorlift generators were near the reactor at the time of the station exploding, which caused the Federation core ship to fall.
 * 5) **I think it's a little to speculatory to say that, but I worded it vaguely enough to work out. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 19:18, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) ***Indeed, I'll review it again soon. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) *<span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * 1) Bah, relapse of Droid Retrieval...
 * 2) * "Although Ventress detested the principals behind the listening post": specifically what kind of principals?
 * 3) **Addressed
 * 4) * Are you sure that it was specifically "Republic Intelligence" that confirmed the station's existence? In Wild Space, I believe it was only referred to simply as "intelligence," and same with "Downfall of a Droid."
 * 5) **Episode guide calls it Repubic Intelligence. I reffed it as such.
 * 6) * For the events surrounding Nachkt's obtaining of R2-D2 and his deal with Grievous, as well as the Mission to suspected Confederate space, can the events be placed better chronologically? They're currently a bit confusing.
 * 7) **Ehrm. Gimme a little bit on that one.
 * 8) ***Better? If I introduce Nachkt any earlier it starts having more focus on Bothawui and less on Skytop Station.
 * 9) * For the second paragraph of "Destruction", "although" starts off sentences twice. Can at least one be varied?
 * 10) **First was changed.
 * 11) * You vary between R3-S6/R3 and R2-D2/R2; can you try to use the droids' full names for consistency? I ran into the same problem when I did the event articles, but I found it was clearer to be consistent.
 * 12) **Done.
 * 13) * "under his watch": this is a bit unspecific and also a bit unclear; can you reword it?
 * 14) **Taken care of.
 * 15) * I would suggest listing Katuunko's DB entry under the Sources, as it was the only place that confirmed the use of Skytop Station to intercept the meeting between the king and the Supreme Chancellor.
 * 16) **In there.
 * 17) * Any more Bts info that might be out there, either from the video commentaries, the episode guides, or any sourcebooks?  CC7567  (talk) 07:22, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **The video commentary pertains exclusively to the Tano/Grievous duel. And the Episode guides have nothing applicable. As far as sourcebooks go, I skimmed the Campaign Guide yesterday and found nothing. It's kind of a straight forward piece of equipment. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 23:57, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) * Kay, last one for now. "Unbeknownst to both Nachkt and Grievous, R2-D2 was never issued a memory wipe, and therefore still retained information on Republic bases and strategies." Can this be moved down, or just removed completely? I'm not getting why it's relevant enough to be mentioned so early here.  CC7567  (talk) 17:57, 7 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) **Outta there. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 01:37, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) Clone Attack II
 * 22) * This is purely superficial, but can you try to standardize the size of the intro paragraphs? They're a bit uneven.
 * 23) **Eh, I'll work on it. It's a little tough because it's a pretty clear separation between a descriptive paragraph and then a historical paragraph, but gimme a bit and I'll see what I can do.
 * 24) ***If you can't work with changing the split, then you can just leave it as it is; it was more of a comment than an objection. I'm striking this, and I'll leave it up to you what you do with it.  CC7567  (talk) 22:22, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) * "giving the Confederacy the ability to ambush Republic fleets": can you try rewording this? I know that this is essentially what the information gave the Confederacy, but it's a bit too general and unspecific. Perhaps something regarding the station's ability to ambush the fleets with the information?
 * 26) **Better?
 * 27) * Can something be said of Tano and Rex's rescue of Skywalker during his scouting mission? I know that it's slightly unrelated to Skytop Station itself, but it's a bit unclear about how they became involved.
 * 28) **Taken care of.
 * 29) * In the second paragraph "Destruction", two sentences begin with "although"; please vary at least one of them.
 * 30) **Done.
 * 31) * Similarly, in the next paragraph, two sentences begin with "as"; please vary sentence structure.
 * 32) **Done.
 * 33) * "Momentarily captured" isn't working very well; it sounds like Tano was captured for "a short amount of time", meaning that she already escaped.
 * 34) **Removed.
 * 35) * Is there a reason its appearance in "Downfall of a Droid" is "referenced to"? Mentioning it this way in the Bts is fine, but I would suggest changing it to Mo or Imo in the Appearances section.
 * 36) **Fixed.
 * 37) *Good work, Trayus.  CC7567  (talk) 21:04, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) **Thank you. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 21:33, 20 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) Given the Republic Heroes game, I think this article should have the Twoconflicting added to it. Also, can you add a touch more on the Hyper-Communications Cartel? I know we don't have much info on it, but some details about it being an Aqualish organization or some such. Finally&mdash;and this is not strictly an objection to this article&mdash;if the station appears in Jedi in Training and Forces of Darkness, could you add it to the appearance lists of those articles? They don't currently have it, nor anything else relating to Skytop. --Eyrezer 00:37, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) *That stupid and obtrusive template has been added and the Communications Cartel has been expanded slightly (I didn't say it was an Aqualish organization as we can't be sure that it employed only Aqualish). Also, Skytop has been added to the appearances lists of those two articles. Darth Trayus Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 06:07, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 41) **I added the template. --Eyrezer 00:07, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

> JangFett  Talk 14:32, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * My jury is still out on the necessity of a commanders and crew section. So if you think it's needed, let me know. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 07:58, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Well, we know that Skytop was crewed by Aqualish technicians, and it also appears that Grievous was in command of the station for some time. So I'd say that a commanders and crew section should be written up, even if it's very short. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 12:00, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * There's one in there now. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 21:33, 25 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Fixed quite a few spelling errors. <span style="font-variant: small-caps; font-family: Verdana; font-size: 12px"
 * You might want to check the Mission to Skytop Station's Bts for the NDS Republic Heroes info. There is some information relevant to the station itself&mdash;the lockdown mechanism, for example. Feel free to ask me if you have any questions. QuiGonJinn  Senate seal.svg(Talk) 16:05, October 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * The information has been added, however it was all taken from that article, so if there's anything pertaining specifically to the station that I'm missing, please let me know. And thank you very much for informing me about this. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 19:48, October 25, 2009 (UTC)