Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/8t88


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(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:08, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) I like. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:54, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Dumb droid.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:36, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:19, 27 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Enough 8s already! Jesus!  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:24, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 19:24, 9 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 20:54, 9 February 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa says
 * 2) * I'm not sure "cash" is the best word to use here. Cash seems to imply the real-world equivalent of paper money, and I'm not sure this even exists IU: "8t88 charged huge fees, to be paid upfront in cash"
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * The second paragraph of "Double cross" is a wee bit play-by-play. Try and trim the fat a little.
 * 5) **See about it now.
 * 6) ***Veddy nice.
 * 7) * "Pitifully" is a bit POV. Try and use a better term: "pitifully plotting to reclaim his lost body"
 * 8) **Addressed.
 * 9) * It seems like you may need an article of sort in this phrase: "while he next resurfaced with ASP droid's head on Omze's Incredible Travelling Starport."
 * 10) **I don't understand what you're saying here.
 * 11) ***Articles, as in "a," "an," "the."
 * 12) * In this context, "amazing" seems a bit POV. It could be changed to state that it was amazing to certain individuals, for ex: "He did, however, have many Human-like emotions, and, amazingly, possessed"
 * 13) **Is "somehow" any better?
 * 14) ***Si, senor.
 * 15) * Is an IR sensor and IR vision not the same thing? "He was also equipped with an infrared sensor, a microscopic imager, a holographic projector/recorder, extremely perceptive audio sensors, a concealed beam transmitter, and a broadband communication antenna, as well as a comlink, heuristic processor, improved sensor package, infrared vision, and translator unit."
 * 16) **My mistake.
 * 17) *Kudos for properly punctuating your quotations! ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:38, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) **All thanks to you. ;) Thanks for the review, T&R. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:09, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***Best line of that whole game..."He is Dark Jedi."..."Jedi?"..."Dark Jedi." Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:54, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 21) * "The Tiss'shar formulated various lies to tell Jerec to account for his failure as he ran to a landing pad on the moon" This doesn't quite make sense, as the droid is not a Tiss'shar.
 * 22) **Supposed to be Tiss'shar droid. Addressed.
 * 23) * "After temporarily incapacitating the Kowakian monkey-lizard, the man killed Grendel and used his lightsaber to carve open one of the hornagaunt's stomachs and retrieve the severed head". Try to avoid using "the man" whenever possible.
 * 24) **Hokay. Addressed.
 * 25) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating Day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:23, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) **I wholeheartedly intend to. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:34, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 28) * Reword "the leading droid in charge"
 * 29) * Reword "every and any living beings" to clear up issues of singular/plural.
 * 30) * The word "though" is heavily overused.
 * 31) * "Jerec's minions had found a map to the valley on the ceiling of Morgan Katarn's home during the events on Nar Shaddaa; they removed them and had them brought to Barons Hed, the moon's capital city."&mdash;Huh?
 * 32) * The comma is also severely overused.
 * 33) **Any better?
 * 34) * Please don't call it a "Lambda-class shuttle" twice.
 * 35) * "Powered by hydraulic tubing"&hellip;"had hydraulic limbs" is redundant.
 * 36) * No information is referenced to "Two Peas in a Pod."
 * 37) **There's only a single mention about his head being used to kill Pic; nothing whatsoever to add to the article.
 * 38) * Graestan ( Talk ) 00:16, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) **All sorted, I think. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 00:49, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 16:13, 10 February 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm back. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:08, 17 January 2008 (UTC)