Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jedidiah


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Jedidiah

 * Nominated by: -- Cull Tremayne 02:06, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Ah, the Forrest Gump of Star Wars.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:56, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) The original Jedi.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:59, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Never-ending fun when Marvel is involved.  Greyman ( Talk ) 14:19, 9 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:45, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Very clean. Stupid time requirement. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:16, 12 October 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Quick note:
 * 2) * You mention his dream at first (in the intro) without explaining what it is. Please give a few words explaining how he wanted to be a Jedi. One can assume, but it's nice to have a definite explanation there.
 * 3) **Tacked "of becoming a Jedi" onto that sentence in the intro.
 * 4) * Also, you use hopeful in consecutive sentences in the Bio.
 * 5) **Could you point out where exactly? A word search turns up no mentions of "hopeful". I might just be overlooking it.
 * 6) **Oh, "hoping". :P Changed.
 * 7) *Nice work, Cull.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:29, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) **Thanks for the review.Cull Tremayne 22:42, 8 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the delusional desk of Atarumaster88
 * 10) * Contextify ISD in intro, please.
 * 11) **Just removed ISD and left it at "Imperial agent". Can't really add context without completely rewording that section.
 * 12) * You mention some brief early stuff in the intro that needs repeated in the biography section.
 * 13) **Could you be a bit more specific? I don't see any info in the intro that isn't repeated in the Bio, but I might just be overlooking it.
 * 14) ***I looked up the source material and made some tweaks to the wording also. You should be fine now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:45, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * The whole first paragraph of Velmorian advisor is awkwardly worded. It needs to flow a little more smoothly, and I think, combined with the objection above, that organizing it chronologically will help.
 * 16) **I'll work on this as soon as I can figure out how the earlier objection applies.
 * 17) * Consistently de-capitalize King and Queen when not used as proper nouns. I fixed several of these, but there are several. Think of it this way: a king is not capitalized, but King George III would be. Etc.
 * 18) **Fixed
 * 19) * Is Loren Human? A bit more context there would be nice.
 * 20) **We don't really know anything about Loren. We know that Leia was able to pass herself off as Loren 20 years later, so we can assume that she was at least humanoid, but that's about it. I'd add more context, but all we really know is that she was from Alderaan. Any suggestions?
 * 21) ***No, that's fine. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:45, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * A couple words of context on Ycaqt would be nice.
 * 23) **Done.
 * 24) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:13, 11 October 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) **Thanks for the review. Cull Tremayne 23:20, 11 October 2008 (UTC)

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