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Wraith Squadron (redux review)

 * Redux comments: Article was Reduxed per INQ Meeting 54. Reason: Over 80 kb of new information added following a Mercy Kill update.
 * Date added: December 16, 2012
 * Changes since last review: diff

Cadeth

 * I've noticed that your character naming is a little sporadic throughout - a lot of characters, Ton Phanan especially, are referred to by their full, first, or last names at various places throughout the article. Shouldn't you make those consistent?
 * It's more consistent now. For readability/clarity purposes, the naming convention is not truly consistent (and shouldn't be IMO), but I'm happy to discuss any further changes you feel need to be made on a case-by-case basis. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 15:55, March 20, 2013 (UTC)
 * The BTS references need to be converted to Cite_web.
 * Converted. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 14:42, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * Other than that, good work. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 18:53, January 30, 2013 (UTC)
 * These are on my list, thanks. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 03:19, February 9, 2013 (UTC)
 * With regards to the character naming, Jesmin Ackbar is more frequently mentioned by full name due to the repeated appearances of Gial Ackbar in the prose. The other adjustments are in progress. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 02:30, February 18, 2013 (UTC)
 * A similar convention occurs with Lara Notsil, only in the segment where her ostensible brother, Tavin Notsil, is mentioned. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 02:00, February 19, 2013 (UTC)
 * A similar convention occurs in the YVW section, where both Luke and Mara Jade Skywalker are named with their full name since both Jedi are present in the mission to Coruscant. A preference for full name is also used in sections where multiple Solos are mentioned. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 17:46, March 1, 2013 (UTC)
 * Maybe an article for the unsafe safe house and the tapcaf safe house on Coruscant?
 * Other than that, it's great. Cade  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg  Calrayn  16:33, April 3, 2013 (UTC)

Glancing by

 * Should the Gray Squadron temporary designation be mentioned and bolded in the intro?
 * Done. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 14:47, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * It might be a good idea to further sub-section the "Members" section, i.e. Antilles and the original roster under something like ===Original roster=== and then further additions subsectioned as necessary. Currently there are a lot of subsections without much apparent organization.
 * Hmm. There's three major sub-divisions I can think of here: the Zsinj-era/GCW Wraiths, the YVW-era new Wraiths, and then the 40 ABY Wraiths. I could also distinguish the original roster from people like Castin Donn and Shalla Nelprin? Would those three/four sub-sections be enough? Do you have a preference between the 3 or 4? Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 14:47, March 27, 2013 (UTC)
 * I think chronology and dates would be a good option&mdash;even if there are some overlaps, some subdivision would be helpful.  CC7567  (talk) 14:28, March 29, 2013 (UTC)
 * I've taken a stab at it; let me know what you think and I'll make the necessary adjustments. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 21:55, April 2, 2013 (UTC)
 * Minor, but WP:DASH needs to be employed correctly with the dates in the section names.  CC7567  (talk) 20:14, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:04, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Not required by policy, but ideally all non-templated citations should use Cite web.  CC7567  (talk) 20:08, March 9, 2013 (UTC)
 * Done. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 14:47, March 27, 2013 (UTC)

Cav

 * citing personnel expenses, - should that be "personal" expenses, or am I missing the point of the phrase?
 * It should be "personnel." Ackbar was saying that pulling experienced pilots and commandos from other units would be a heavy drain on New Republic personnel. I can rephrase if you think it's unclear. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Can we get some ranks thrown in for characters upon first appearance? Especially since Antilles' bet involves his eventual promotion.
 * Added some ranks. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Context on Jesmin and Eurrsk upon first mention is needed.
 * Contextified. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Really shouldn't have started this close to midnight my time. Will carry on tomorrow. - Sir Cavalier of One FarStar.svg( Squadron channel ) 23:17, April 3, 2013 (UTC)
 * Infobox - under headquarters, would the Borleias base during the Vong war be appropriate, as well as the bases the Wraiths used during Mercy Kill?
 * Article for the Teradoc mission needs to be created and linked to.
 * Daala's ouster - can you be specific as to who is meant here? The ouster was effectively the Jedi Order, but if I read the article right, Maddeus was the one to give Loran the assignment - and he wasn't introduced until Mercy Kill.
 * Do we have an article for the ersatz Rogue Squadron?
 * Context for Tycho, Wes and Hobbie upon first mention
 * Contextified. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * I think the location of Folor Base could be worked into the article
 * Included. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Do we have articles for the kleptomaniac and Talz candidates?
 * Context for Runt and Sarkin upon first mention.
 * Contextified. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Later, Ekwesh revealed to Tainer that he had multiple minds or personalities, - please clarify whether this is a species trait to the Thakwaash or a mental disorder unique to the pilot
 * Clarified. Atarumaster88  Jedi_Order.svg ( Talk page ) 16:18, April 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * Context for Doldrums
 * Under "Surprise attack", you mention the fighters are ground while transport are launching, then go on to detail how the NR forces didn't light their engines until the Implacable went for the diversion. Please clarify.
 * Where did the smuggling compartment for the Lunatic come from?
 * What weapon is Piggy using? A blaster or a chopped down laser cannon?
 * Do we have articles for the Governors of Viamarr and Xartun? And the transparisteel factory? And the Durasteel one on Belthu?
 * Do we have article for the various locations mentioned on Storinal? Also, the Wraith attack on Zsinj's facility.
 * The cyborg that attacked the Wraiths on Coruscant - is there an article for him?
 * General objection - can you insert some relevant images in the areas that are text-heavy? Stuff like related characters like Zsinj, or planets, etc.
 * Up to piracy. Will continue shortly. - Sir Cavalier of One FarStar.svg( Squadron channel ) 15:19, April 4, 2013 (UTC)
 * Article required for the navigator of the Barderia
 * Eventually, though, eight of the Wraiths in X-wings returned to Mon Remonda for at least one mission, in order to maintain the illusion that the squadron was still stationed on the Mon Calamari Star Cruiser with the rest of Han Solo's anti-Zsinj task force. - it is never established that the Wraiths were assigned to the Mon Remonda in the first place, and a cover was required.
 * Article for the asteroid base and its take over during the Bastion raid is needed. Also, the subsequent battle/skirmish over Halmad.
 * More detail on the Second Death ruse is needed.
 * Teradoc stuff - the intention of the Wraiths mission to Ryvester should be mentioned earlier. Also, how was putting the explosive in the vault and the fact the bomb had pressure sensors connected?
 * Context for Yuuzhan Vong, Yuuzhan Vong War.
 * landed safely on the now unrecognizable planet - why was the planet unrecognizable?
 * Article is needed for the battery pack droids.
 * A direct link between Durra posing as "Avvan Hocroft" should be made before detailing Loran's mission to inserted references to the individual in the GA database.
 * Articles are needed for the various bases/ safehouses used by the Wraiths throughout Mercy Kill.
 * More detail on the third Wraith group is needed, including member names, etc.
 * In general, I think the linking could do with a solid going over, and context is needed in some places. We may already have a lot of the articles I'm asking to link to, but since I haven't read the Wraith books in a long time, I'd have to reread them to be sure any linking I added was correct.
 * You've made me want to reread all the Wraith books now. - Sir Cavalier of One FarStar.svg( Squadron channel ) 15:04, April 5, 2013 (UTC)