Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Celeste Morne (second nomination)


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Celeste Morne
"M'lady, it's time. Shall we?''" "''We shall."
 * Nominated by:A joint production by —Tommy  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) and Cylka  -talk- 21:53, 26 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

- Tommy and Cylka, solidifying their partnership

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1) SingAurraSing
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 22:21, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:08, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) How could you not vote for the chick that's about 4,000 freaking years, and still manages to look hot? Joking aside, it's a solid article. Good job, Lord Anvil and Lady Cylka.--Jedi Kasra (talk) 15:37, 16 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Oh look, that butterfly is back. Kilson Likes PIE 04:02, 27 June 09 (UTC)
 * 6)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 04:55, 28 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 08:23, 14 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:29, 31 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * "After receiving the message concerning a secret Imperial weapon abandoned on a moon, Vader's children, Luke Skywalker and Princess Leia Organa, led a team of Rebels to investigate." - You don't really need to call them Vader's children. It just makes things more confusing for a newcomer. Instead, describe them as Rebel agents, or something. Otherwise, very nice. Thefourdotelipsis 05:09, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Addressed. Thank you for the review, Fourdot. Please advise if anything else is required. —Tommy Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( Nine two eight one ) 12:22, 18 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Graestan the Merciless:
 * 2) * I really wouldn't bother stating which people aside from Zayne were in the Covenant's vision&mdash;that can be revealed later. Just give descriptions, make it more from their perspective.
 * 3) **Addressed by Cylka. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 22:12, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * The asides about what Morne thinks of Carrick need to be dropped from the bio; detail about the events is fine, but if you're going to sum up Morne's thoughts it should go in the P&T.
 * 5) **I believe this too was addressed by Cylka. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 01:50, 11 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * No need to list all the people on the Williwaw, really.
 * 7) **Addressed by Cylka. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 22:12, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * "&hellip;and passed by blood and trade through many hands until, by twist of fate, it came into the possession&hellip;" – I'd just replace this with more specific and less fancy wording; as it stands it almost sounds as though there are many stories to be told but you have chosen not to.
 * 9) **Addressed by —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 22:12, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) * "with the Muur Talisman still attached to her neck and the presence of the spirit of Karness Muur" – This is pretty awkward. Be more specific, say what the spirit is doing or something, please.
 * 11) **Addressed by —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 22:12, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * You can't call Luke and Leia twins offhand without establishing it, and I don't feel it appropriate to establish it in this article where it's in no way relevant.
 * 13) **Addressed by Cylka. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 22:12, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) *More later. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:45, 7 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) One thing: "convinced Morne and Carrick to pretend to be his in order" to be his what? Slaves?
 * 16) *Should be good now. Thanks for the review, Chack. Please advise if anything further is required. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 03:00, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *Aside from this, great work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:16, 28 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) A question since I can't remember: "...which could transform non-Force-sensitive beings into mindless mutants known as rakghouls" was it only non-Force-sensitives who would be transformed into rakghouls, since in the Legacy arc, Cade and Alzyn are bitten and begin to transform?  Grunny  ( Talk ) 14:49, 20 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) *The Talisman only worked on non Force-sensitives, while the bite worked on anyone. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 16:12, 20 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) My review of the first half of the article
 * 21) * You should point out in the intro that the talisman allowed her to live for hundreds of years.
 * 22) **Done
 * 23) * "Morne transformed the Rebels into rakghouls and attacked Skywalker and Organa," The sentance makes it sound as if all the rebels transformed into rakghouls.
 * 24) **Addressed.
 * 25) * Could you create a page for "Muur Talisman vision"?
 * 26) **We are not in violation of policy by having a redlink within the body of the article. We will get to it in due time. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 05:22, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 27) * You might want to mention in the Taris subsection that Taris was under seige because of the Mandalorian Wars.
 * 28) **Addressed
 * 29) * "Several of the Uhumele's crew managed to escape." Other than Crys, didn't everyone else escape?
 * 30) **Done
 * 31) *I'll do my review of the article's second half after these are addressed, nice job so far. Kilson Likes PIE 01:35, 25 June 09 (UTC)
 * 32) **Thanks for the review, Kilson. Cylka  -talk- 20:02, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 33) Kilson review part 2
 * 34) * Like I said about the intro, you need to mention in the One Hundred Years Later section that the talisman allowed her to survive so long.
 * 35) **That is already stated in the first sentence of the last paragraph in the "Galactic Civil War" section. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 03:55, 27 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 36) * In the last paragraph of the Had Abbadon subsection, could you give a little more context on Morne's healing abilities.
 * 37) **Addressed.
 * 38) *Other than that, nice job. Kilson Likes PIE 02:37, 26 June 09 (UTC)
 * 39) **Thank you for the review, Kilson. Please advise if anything further is required of us. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 03:55, 27 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 40) Grunny again:
 * 41) * "Their deception was discovered by Jedi Master Feln, and contacting Lucien Draay, the two did not believe that Morne would betray the Covenant" This could be worded clearer. The current structure could read that "Their" and "the two" refer to the same people.
 * 42) **Should be good now. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No quarter given, all exits sealed ) 11:27, 27 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 43) *I've finished reading the bio and will read the rest tomorrow :-).  Grunny  ( Talk ) 08:44, 27 June 2009 (UTC)

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