Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Lott Dod


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Lott Dod

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:15, February 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: After a lengthy absence from the FAN page, Grand Moff Tranner makes his triumphant return!

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Will Yularen or Intimidator appear here soon? Xd1358  Talk 13:19, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Intimidator should be up within the week; Yularen will make his appearance here only when TCW is over. :p Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 21:05, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) The objections have been overruled -This is outrageous! Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:32, February 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:09, February 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 19:25, February 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 20:44, March 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 19:35, March 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) --Eyrezer 02:59, March 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I object! &mdash; The FAN recognizes Skippy Farlstendoiro
 * 2) * Intro: However, Dod's true allegiance was to the Federation and the Confederacy. You mean instead of what? The Senate?
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) * Bio: the "bloated" Federation I "dislike" the use of "inverted commas" in "Featured Articles." Could you "reword" that? ·;) Ditto for "malfunction" later (I suggest "pretend to malfunction")
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Bio: dressed extravagantly. Sounds borderline WP:NPOV unless OS specifically says so.
 * 7) **Removed.
 * 8) * Invasion: The Jedi ambassadors were not called as witnesses when Dod protested Amidala's claims. Why was that? Weren't they officially in Naboo?
 * 9) **I really don't see a need to explain that the Jedi weren't present - it would be too unwieldy, IMO.
 * 10) * Invasion: Valorum asked Amidala to defer, but she was resolute and announced she would not defer. "Defer" used twice in a row, can you replace one with a synonym?
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) * Separatist: During the PDC3141-02 incident, Dod "called the situation outrageous" and "said" stuff. Where? Did he said that to the Senate, to the press, to the Federation...?
 * 13) **Done.
 * 14) * Image: "Dod displays his innocence in an insincere gesture." Can you back this caption? I mean, does the OS (E1 Visual Dictionary) specify that Dod is doing that in the picture?
 * 15) **Yes, that's why I included the reference.
 * 16) * You use the word "outrageous" four times in the body of the article, two of them in inverted commas to quote Dod, plus one "outraged". Seriously, can't you replace Dod's tagline with some synonym?
 * 17) **Removed some of them.
 * 18) * Sources: Is there any reference to Dod in Episode I Insider's Guide?
 * 19) **Don't have that, but I'll ask around for assistance.
 * 20) ***This last objection is still active. Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:44, February 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 21) ****Taken care of, with much-appreciated help from SavageBob. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 01:44, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) *Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:12, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 21:05, February 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * 24) I object too!
 * 25) * P&T should contain more from the Senate Spy.
 * 26) **I don't see the need - I wanted the P&T to sum up Dod's characteristics from all his appearances, and therefore not focus too much on one single appearance. Besides, all the information on Dod from "Senate Spy" is in its proper place in the bio.
 * 27) ***Good point. Kreivi Wolter 10:35, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) * Shouldn't Anakin's presence on Dod's palace be at least mentioned in the article? Kreivi Wolter 22:42, February 6, 2010 (UTC)
 * 29) **Again, I feel that would be unnecessary. Skywalker doesn't interact with Dod at all. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 00:07, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 30) ***Yet another good point. Kreivi Wolter 10:35, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 31) * Information from ? Kreivi Wolter 18:38, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 32) **Just because other characters comment on Dod does not mean that they should be mentioned in his Bio.  CC7567  (talk) 20:30, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 33) ***Besides, seeing as that dialogue did not appear in the final episode, we don't know if that information is canon or not. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 21:18, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 34) ****Ok, not for the bio, but should it be putted into the appearances-section with Mo? Many articles, like Battle of Dorin seems to use the link as a canonical appearance. Kreivi Wolter 14:49, February 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 35) *****If anything, it's a source, nothing more. I'm not putting it as an appearance just because it's listed as such in other articles. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 15:42, February 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 36) ******I won't srtike my objection just yet. If the link is canonical, it should be in the article. I think it's a matter of debate. Kreivi Wolter 15:49, February 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 37) Attack of the Clone
 * 38) * Can you changed one of the excessive "dominated" usages early on in the Bio?
 * 39) **Should be better now.
 * 40) * "After learning of the events, they did not protest when technicians utilized field disruptors to deactivate the droids." "They" who?
 * 41) **Clarified.
 * 42) * Can the second paragraph of the "Allegiances revealed" section be shortened at all to focus more on Dod?
 * 43) **Shortened a bit, but I don't think I can take out much more.
 * 44) *Very clean. Nice work.  CC7567  (talk) 00:28, February 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 45) **Thanks for the review, CC. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 18:28, February 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 46) The Grand Master
 * 47) * Is Cloak of Deception a source for Palpatine being the same person as Sidious?
 * 48) **Sourced it to Episode III.
 * 49) * Rather minor, but isn't the image in the "Separatist Crisis" section out of place? Could it be moved to the "Wartime Investments" section, perhaps, and the following image then be moved down to the final paragraph of the "Allegiances Revealed" section?
 * 50) **Done.
 * 51) *Great work, as usual. Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 02:14, March 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 52) **Thanks for the review, Jon. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 20:26, March 2, 2010 (UTC)

Comments


 * Should the "Confederacy individuals"-category be added to this article? Kreivi Wolter 16:35, March 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * No need. Category:Trade Federation members is a subcategory of Category:Confederacy individuals. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 00:14, March 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Maybe, bu the FA Rune Haako has both of them. Should it be removed from there, or added for this? Kreivi Wolter 08:59, March 20, 2010 (UTC)