Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Unidentified Jabiimi city

Unidentified Jabiimi city

 * Nominated by: Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 03:53, January 22, 2013 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:


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(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Although I'm supporting, it might be good to split it into two sentences.  501st  dogma ( talk ) 02:57, January 23, 2013 (UTC)
 * 2) Winterz (talk) 21:56, January 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) Bone...for...tuna? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 07:11, January 27, 2013 (UTC)

Object Comments
 * 1) Winterz
 * 2) * Just like Dogma pointed out, you should split that sentence. Winterz (talk) 14:39, January 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 3) **Personally, it looks worse, but take a look. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 16:34, January 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Na Cade, your previous sentence was way too large. Plus, a few things could still be added there eh? :p
 * 5) * Now that I've noticed that Jabiimi rebellion, isn't it significant enough to warrant its own article?
 * 6) **No, it's just general resistance to the Empire.
 * 7) * In the Fulminiss article you gave there some info saying "the Sith Emperor himself requested Fulminiss perform extensive research into eliminating the populations of entire planets.", you sure he did not request this event as well?
 * 8) **Done.
 * 9) * Could you specify that the world was conquered/controlled by the Sith Empire? This would be best to do early in the article (an emdash situation right after Jabiim should do the trick ;) ) Winterz (talk) 17:18, January 25, 2013 (UTC)
 * 10) **Done. Cade   Calrayn  StupidRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit.svg 21:36, January 25, 2013 (UTC)