Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Kamlin


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Kamlin

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:47, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Guest nom for WP:KOTOR; Short, sweet, to the point; hoping to balance out the length of Zam Wesell&hellip;

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 23:11, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 13:05, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  13:09, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:57, 30 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Please watch linking, though.  CC7567  (talk) 03:30, 3 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Green Tentacle (Talk) 23:05, 3 August 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) NaruHina
 * 2) * "Following the abrupt entry of fellow Padawan Zayne Carrick, she pitched in to help cover the damages." What damages?
 * 3) **Done. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:51, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * "Kamlin became one of the most promising students as she was placed under the tutelage of Jedi Master, and Jedi Covenant member, Raana Tey." I don't understand. Was her prowess because of her tutalage to Tey, or was her prowess shown by her being assigned to Tey?
 * 5) **Fixed. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:51, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * What specific issues was she mentioned in during the Vector arc?
 * 7) **I was told she's not. That is a relic from before. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:51, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * "He later prophesied that he would finally have his name cleared for the crimes which the masters committed. Carrick was eventually cleared of the crimes." Try to vary "cleared of the crime." It's also choppy, please try to merge the sentences.
 * 9) **No, merging would not clear it up. I reworded it instead. I should have added those statements on Xamar earlier, however. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:51, 24 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) IFYLOFD:
 * 11) * Is the caption under the infobox picture really necessary?
 * 12) * The double refs aren't necessary.
 * 13) * "During their meditation, however, the Jedi Masters had a vision about their deaths and the supposed it to the rise of a Dark Lord of the Sith. " The supposed to the rise?
 * 14) * Context on the Jedi Covenant.
 * 15) * The caption for the image in Legacy says "Kamlin, laying dead at the hands of Raana Tey, under her master", although the picture is of Xamar.
 * 16) *Other than that, looks good.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 23:38, 25 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) **Addressed via IRC. Thanks, Floyd. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:37, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) Cav:
 * 19) * The opening quote doesn't feel reflective of Kamlin, as it is from a nightmare version of herself ... how about moving it to the Legacy section, and shifting the quote from Jedi training section to the lead?
 * 20) * Is there no picture of a "normal" Kamlin to go in the infobox? The nightmare version is, again, not reflective of her as she was. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 10:37, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **Addressed over IRC. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 13:04, 29 July 2009 (UTC)

Comments


 * Please enlarge the rogue moon image. When images are that small, they become more of a distraction from the text than an addition to it. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 04:17, 26 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Enlargened. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)
 * For the record, the infobox image is the best image of Kamlin that exists. She is drawn very small in the panels and it has been incredibly difficult to acquire a good scan&mdash;and one with all her facial features drawn. I'll keep working on it, but it does not look promising. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 13:07, 29 July 2009 (UTC)