Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Jesse


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Jesse

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 01:52, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: It certainly has been a while since the last time I nommed a GAN. :P

(3 ACs/5 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1) Pre-nom review. Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 02:04, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) &mdash;fodigg  BlackRebelStarbird.png (talk) | 19:00, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) -- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:07, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 16:39, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Clean as...Jesse's head? :P -- 1358  (Talk) 18:15, April 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Cylka  -talk- 21:21, April 8, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  20:28, April 13, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8)  Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 23:40, April 13, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Attack of a clone (who doesn't know grammer)
 * 2) * P&T: Mention that he could fly a BARC Speeder.
 * 3) **I don't see its importance to mention. Mostly all troops can drive these. :P
 * 4) ***If you think so.
 * 5) * BtS: Who voiced him ?
 * 6) **Addressed
 * 7) * Bio: I don't think Jesse alone shot down the commando droids.
 * 8) **It's not important to mention. Neither the episode or its guide even mentions that clone.
 * 9) ***Well, but it is incorrect that Kix and Hardcase stayed at Rex.
 * 10) ****It was Kix and Hardcase, though. If you take a look at the episode, you can briefly see their armor. Also, Kix informed Jesse of Rex's condition after he returned.
 * 11) *That's all from me. Good work. Has he FA length?  Clone Commander Lee  Talk 19:39, March 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 12) **Thanks.
 * 13) **Anytime.-- Clone Commander Lee  Talk 18:14, March 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 14) From the Council Chambers:
 * 15) * "After Jesse, Kix, and Hardcase arrived near Kenobi's men,": "arrived near" is a bit awkward.
 * 16) * Is there any way to expand the P&T a little more?
 * 17) **I double checked the episode, Jonathan, and I couldn't find any other information.
 * 18) ***OK, just wanted to make sure. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 16:39, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) *Otherwise, looks OK after a copy-edit. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 22:49, March 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) **Thanks for the review, Jonathan. :)
 * 21) Cylka:
 * 22) * After landing on the planet, the Republic group spotted a crashed ship. Soon, Jesse, along with troopers Kix and Hardcase, went with Clone Captain CC-7567 to find abandoned escape pods. - Abandoned escape pods imply that they found empty escape pods. Was this the case? Also, were the escape pods from the crashed ship? Please clarify this.
 * 23) **Yes, they were abandoned. The latter objection is addressed.
 * 24) * droids overlooked the group and utilized a sniper rifle to fire at CC-7567. - the word overlooked doesn't work well in this case.
 * 25) **Addressed
 * 26) * I think that it would read better if you pipelinked Rex to CC-7567 and used the nickname Rex in the intro.
 * 27) **Addressed
 * 28) * He, like all clone troopers, was one of the many clones - This sounds a bit redundant. Please reword it.
 * 29) **Addressed
 * 30) * jettisoned onboard an escape pod from his starship - This sounds a bit awkward.
 * 31) **Addressed
 * 32) * In the intro you mention that Jesse and another clone destroyed the droids, but in the main body you only mention Jesse.
 * 33) **Yeah, I removed that clone from the body and forgot to remove him from the intro; the clone is not important to mention. Addressed.
 * 34) * Some of the sentences don't transition very well from one sentence to the next, especially in the main body. I feel that you use Jesse's name too often and that the sentences could be reworked a bit to eliminate that.
 * 35) **Addressed
 * 36) * Taking great concern for Rex's health, Jesse realized that they were on farmland, - What does one have to do with the other?
 * 37) **Addressed
 * 38) * IS it important that his armor had light blue markings? If yes, why?
 * 39) **I took this example from my Fil FA. :P If the "blue markings" doesn't seem right within the article, I will remove it.
 * 40) *Not bad, Jang. Please take care of these things and I'll take another look. Cylka  -talk- 02:01, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * 41) **Thanks for the review, Cylka. :)
 * 42) The Grand Master
 * 43) * "Before the team departed, Rex gave Jesse the responsibility&hellip;" Why was the team departing?
 * 44) **Addressed
 * 45) * "Loyal" is a bit of a general/POV thing to say in the P/T, unless the source actually states him as such.
 * 46) **Yeah, I double checked the episode and couldn't find anything. The episode guide was also deemed worthless, so I removed it.
 * 47) * I don't have access to the episode, but can we say for sure how "polite" Jesse was in asking Suu's permission? Again, this is dangerously POV-sounding Jonjedigrandmaster  Jedi symbol.svg ( We seed the stars ) 01:29, April 10, 2010 (UTC)
 * 48) **I tried replacing it, but it didn't fit. Removed. Thanks for the review, Jonny. :)

Comments


 * Oops, I forgot to add that I removed Suu as being a Twi'lek since it had no bearing on the article. Cylka  -talk- 02:13, April 4, 2010 (UTC)
 * Sure thing. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 18:38, April 4, 2010 (UTC)