Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Spelunker probe droid (second nomination)


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Spelunker probe droid

 * Nominated by: 11:19, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My first attempt.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Your first vote. I was tracking the article edits from my watchlist.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:24, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I expect many more GA/FAs from you Soresu ;-).  Grunny  (Talk) 03:10, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Good job for a first GA! Cylka  -talk- 04:55, 8 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Jinzler 22:31, 15 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:26, 1 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --Eyrezer 11:22, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I was waiting for it Soresu :). One minor thing:
 * 2) * "The droid's name may have been derived from the word "spelunker," a person who explores underground areas either professionally or for sport." Stating that the droids name may have been derived from the word spelunker is orginal research, so it would be better to instead simply state what "spelunker" means without the speculative wording.
 * 3) **Done.
 * 4) *Other than that great work Soresu :-).  Grunny  (Talk) 11:58, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **Thanks Grunny. : ) 05:54, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Spelunkers feature in The Clone Wars Campaign Guide, so the article needs information from that adding to it. I will do this somewhen over the next few days, unless someone else does first --Jinzler 22:35, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *That would be very much appreciated. 05:54, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) **Added it --Jinzler 22:29, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) ***Thanks. 05:33, 6 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Cylka:
 * 11) * A little bit more context on the Commerce Guild, and the Techno Union. Specifically who were they and what was their primary purpose.
 * 12) **Done?
 * 13) * The Arakyd Spelunker probe droid was overhauled by several Techno Union designers to become the chameleon droid,[1] removing the chest sensors and replacing them with three laser cannons - the last part of the sentence is dangling a bit. Please rewrite to link it together a bit more.
 * 14) **I lengthened the sentence and then split it.
 * 15) * A bit more context is needed for the contract between Arakyd Industries and the Commerce Guild.
 * 16) **Explained.
 * 17) * The first sentence of the Clone Wars section shouldn't be isolated. See if you can fit it in somewhere.
 * 18) **I could integrate it into the third paragraph of the Clone Wars, but that would put it out of chronology with the 2nd paragraph. Any suggestions?
 * 19) ***I reworked the first sentence a bit and integrated with the following paragraph.
 * 20) * The Commerce Guild Punitive Security Forces began to deploy chameleon droids in units of five, although sometimes up to twenty such units would be sent to deal with a particularly tough target. The Techno Union Droid Army also grouped them the droids in the same way, but the maximum amount of units they would use in a single engagement was twelve. - This paragraph is also fairly short, and arbitrary. It needs some context.
 * 21) **I've given it a short lead-in. If it still isn't long enough, please provide some suggestions.
 * 22) * These units were deactivated after the execution... - Which units? All of them, or just those three on Felucia. Please explain this a bit more.
 * 23) **All of them were deactivated.
 * 24) *Good job Soresu! Cylka  -talk- 07:12, 7 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 25) **Thank you for the review. 23:22, 7 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Note to self: If this doesn't get through by the end of the week, I should consider getting started on KotOR GA's. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 05:07, 5 March 2009 (UTC)