Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Teta


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Teta

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:34, 31 July 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: after a rather long hiatus, I've finally produced another WP:TOTJ nom.

(5 Inq/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Greyman ( Talk ) 14:24, 3 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 13:34, 6 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Acky is back at it.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:28, 6 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:13, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Yes, I actually do read some TOTJ voluntarily.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:26, 11 August 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * 1) 'From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
 * 2) * The last two sentences in the P&T are unreferenced. - Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 08:50, 6 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Got 'em now. I think I'd accidentally cut off the last fragment of the sentence. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:18, 6 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa:
 * 5) * As I'm unfamiliar with the source, I'm not sure what this is saying exactly. Please do a little to clarify: "Sadow used Corsair once again, manipulating the flares of the Dena rii Nova and destroying the ships in his wake;"
 * 6) **I've clarified a little bit, though the whole thing's kind of confusing. Let me know if it's still bothering you and I'll see what the NEC has to say (I would check now, but can't till the morning).
 * 7) ***It works for me. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:13, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * I would like to see the third paragraph of the Life and Legacy section broken up into at least one more paragraph.
 * 9) **Broken up.
 * 10) **Not really an objection, but it seems like you should make mention of the other sources I've added into the appropriate BTS paragraph, since that's the direction you seem to be going with that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:48, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ***Done. Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:45, 8 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 13) * "Teta was known for both her martial and diplomatic skills, and she had no qualms about leading her troops from the front. She donned a suit of ceremonial armor during many of her public appearances, and during her reign, she personally directed many battles against potential usurpers to great success." I would tone this down some in the bio. It's more appropriate for P&T.
 * 14) **Shifted most of it to P&T.
 * 15) * "he established a trade alliance," With whom? Clarify please.
 * 16) **Done.
 * 17) * "began to build up her army again, despite it being so soon after the end of a war." Could you clarify that last bit?
 * 18) **I just removed it, cause there's no proper explanation (though it seems kind of obvious).
 * 19) * "while the Jedi studied the Sith" Reword. I doubt they were studying actual Sith.
 * 20) **"I studied the Romans at school." I'm not sure there's a problem with it.
 * 21) * "The system hit back, though, after the Emperor's fall," Reword please.
 * 22) **Reworded.
 * 23) * Having actually read some TotJ, I feel her P&T could use some more fleshing out.
 * 24) **I added in three lines from the bio like you asked; anything more specific?
 * 25) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:08, 11 August 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) **Will do. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:56, 11 August 2008 (UTC)