Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Davish Krail


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Davish Krail

 * Nominated by: Thefourdotelipsis 14:50, 23 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I don't care where you're from, chinstrap neglect = badassery.

(5 Inqs/0 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  12:59, 28 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) -  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 14:12, 3 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:58, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:16, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Good show, Master Fourdot. —Tommy9281 [[Image:Red lightsaber.png|20px]] ( Peace is a lie ) 16:07, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Chances are good he's also in Star Wars: The National Public Radio Dramatization, though I don't have it and cannot tell you. Please check and add to the source list if so. I know Muuurgh has it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:18, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) **Got that added, apparently it's just the movie lines, though.
 * 4) * The way this reads just kind of bugs me. I'd rather you rewrite it to say simply it followed them there: "Organa and her companions had also brought the Death Star itself to the Yavin system"
 * 5) **Yes, that does read poorly. I've tried to flesh that out a bit, but if you still think it needs a total overhaul, I'm more than happy to do so.
 * 6) ***It's fine. It reads better now. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:58, 8 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * I'd like to see a little bit added to the preliminary details of the battle plan that Krail and the Y-wings were intended for the first attack run, because they were in the Y-wings
 * 8) **Elaborated. I've used another source to describe the purpose of the Y-wing, but if you know of a source that specifically states that the Y-wings were chosen because they were bombers, that'd be great.
 * 9) ***As a matter of fact, I do. :) From Star War Journal: The Fight For Justice, which I added to the apps list, Luke Skywalker's journal reads, "My group, Red Flight, was assigned to run interference. Gold Flight, Y-wing fighters, were going to go for the exhaust port. They had stronger armaments and a better chance of hitting the target."
 * 10) * In reference to Chack's comments below, I'd still like to see mention of him keeping his helmet in the P/T, even if you can't supplement it with anything. The reader can still infer the meaning behind it. Maybe even something about that chinstrap? Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:04, 6 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **Added something. I did want to mention the chinstrap. :D Thefourdotelipsis 06:05, 7 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 13) * "commander of the X-wing Red Squadron, to the threat. " Reword this, please. (intro)
 * 14) **Not sure how I can reword that...do you have any suggestions?
 * 15) ***Tossed something in, see how it looks. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 15:16, 11 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * Almost hate to bring this up, but what about Green Squadron? I've never heard specifically whether they were or weren't in the battle/existed.
 * 17) **They fought there, and they've been added now.
 * 18) *Otherwise clean. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 13:59, 10 July 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Thanks for the review. Thefourdotelipsis 01:47, 11 July 2008 (UTC)

Comments


 * 1) Is there anything you could say about how he kept his helmet for years in the P&T (sentimental value, perhaps)? I suspect that's OR though.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:44, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Yes, it would be. Thefourdotelipsis 11:44, 28 June 2008 (UTC)