Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Quockran


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Quockran

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 08:42, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A wannabe Hutt species...

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) This is a great first step, or crawl, to nominate Hutt one day. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:06, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 11:15, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Good job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 16:36, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Oddly enough, I like scrapping asteroids too. ~ SavageBob 04:13, April 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Grunny  ( talk ) 09:31, May 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 17:09, May 2, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 22:49, May 2, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Farlstendoiro was already familiar with this species' damage resistance
 * 2) * You link slugs not to gastropod molluscs, but to lead projectiles.
 * 3) * The intro says they are slugs; Bio says they resembled giant slugs. Choose one.
 * 4) * Bio: "Quockrans averaged between 1.4 and 1.7 meters, although some could grow as long as 2 meters" If you are talking about their length, you should specify it in the first part of the sentence; you seem to suggest you are talking about their height.
 * 5) * Society: The different droid models could use individual articles.
 * 6) *Gosh, another alien using the Xamster social networking site. Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:26, April 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) **These should all be addressed. I didn't give the Imperial droids a link as these are just "regular" droids. --Eyrezer 11:02, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Final paragraph encased in the RPG scenario tags is unsourced. -  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:15, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 9) Toprawa:
 * 10) * Can we at least leave a redlink for this city? "in their homeworld's sole city"
 * 11) **Link added
 * 12) * Is there nothing from the Star Wars Encyclopedia? Given the publishing time frame of some of the other sources included, it seems like they may have received a mention within.
 * 13) **Nope
 * 14) * I wasn't sure if this was a mistake in the date or not, so I added a comma here to specify that this event took place in 1 ABY. Please revise if I am incorrect: "Shortly after the Battle of Yavin, in 1 ABY,"
 * 15) **I was actually using the date to refer to the Battle of Yavin, but as this creates inherent problems, I've now removed the 1 ABY altogether. The source doesn't specify it is within a year of Yavin.
 * 16) * And finally, not an objection, but I moved the non-canon George Lucas book into a "non-canon" subsection, since the non-canon tag notes the item as an "appearance," which isn't technically correct for our purposes. Feel free to format that as you see fit. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:20, April 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 17) **That's fine. Thanks for the review. --Eyrezer 10:57, April 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 19) * There's a bit of repetitive language that could be cleaned up. For example, the word droid or droids appears many times in quick succession. Would it be possible to replace a few of these with synonyms, like automaton/automata? The same thing happens with "the fourth planet in the Quockra system, a star system..." with system being the offender. Then climate is repeated in the next couple sentences.
 * 20) * "and most inhabitants of the Minos Cluster were unaware they existed." Is this they the Quockrans or the droids?
 * 21) * Can you stub the researcher who hires the adventurers for the scenario to find the Quockrans? That's it. Nice work. ~ SavageBob 16:10, April 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * 22) **Should all be addressed --Eyrezer 11:51, April 27, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Thanks to for supplying the Monsters and Aliens from George Lucas info. --Eyrezer 09:00, April 19, 2010 (UTC)