Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Barren planetoid


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Barren planetoid

 * Nominated by: Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 20:49, August 3, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Rezi Soresh's last stand

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Object
 * 1) Barren Fel
 * 2) * The infobox establishes a lot about the planetoid --- no moons, no native flora, no native fauna, no indigenous population, barren rock --- this should all be in the article's body, too.
 * 3) *Try to avoid one-sentence paragraphs. They're generally a no-no.
 * 4) *"When the deadline passed..." What deadline? Mention that Soresh gave a deadline when you establish that he wants to lure Skywalker to the system.
 * 5) *Give context on Han Solo.
 * 6) *"Soresh used an impostor..." used the impostor for what? Welcoming the rebels?
 * 7) *Who captured Skywalker and his companions? The article doesn't mention that Soresh has any companions on the planetoid.
 * 8) *Who are Luke's other companions? A rebel squad?
 * 9) *A little bit of context is needed on the Emperor.
 * 10) *"He drew an Imperial and Rebel fleet" makes it sound like there's a joint Rebel-Imperial fleet.
 * 11) *"Skywalker betrayed Soresh and led his companions away." Can you give a little bit more detail?
 * 12) *"including Soresh's body" is detail that probably isn't relevant to the article about the planetoid.
 * 13) *You mention a battle --- can you create an article for said battle?
 * 14) *Does Uprising give any other details about the planetoid that could find their way into the article? Menkooroo 02:17, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **All of the above addressed. Of coures, it is now well over the wordcount. Corellian PremierAll along the watchtower 17:47, August 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) ***Awesome! Go for a Good article nomination if you feel it's ready. You'll have to leave a message here requesting that the Educorps remove this nom, as it's now ineligible for CA status. Menkooroo 01:13, August 18, 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * Note for the Grey Cadre: As stated above, this article is now over 250 words. Menkooroo 15:02, August 25, 2010 (UTC)