Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Ngaaluh


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(6 Inqs/3 Users/9 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated.Harrar 15:34, 16 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 2) Goodwood  [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 23:32, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman ( Paratus ) 01:56, 24 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 04:22, 24 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  02:37, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) Thefourdotelipsis 07:06, 3 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Excellent work.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:14, 18 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) pushes something heavy NGAAL...UH!  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 17:41, 21 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) Jaina Solo ( Talk ) [[Image:Jainasolosig.gif |25px]] 23:02, 21 January 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) A few things:
 * 2) * "Ngaaluh was a female Yuuzhan Vong Deception Sect priestess; during the Yuuzhan Vong War, however, she became a leading member of the heretical movement among the lower castes of her species, a movement which eventually proved crucial in the downfall of the Yuuzhan Vong Empire." I suggest removing the semi-colon and making these two separate sentences.
 * 3) **Yeah I rearranged the intro a little. See how you like it Harrar 09:36, 17 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 4) * Link villip the first time it's mentioned.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 16:18, 16 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 5) **Linked. Thanks for your help. Harrar 09:36, 17 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 6) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 7) * Can we get bullet points for the Affiliation field of the infobox?
 * 8) **Yep! Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 9) * The IU consensus seems to be that "Deception Sect" should not be capitalized, please fix.
 * 10) **De-capitalized everywhere. Except for Deception sect in infobox. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 11) * Please reword "by her mysterious wartime captive" in the intro for accuracy. Vergere was not her captive specifically, rather the subject of her interrogation efforts.
 * 12) **Done. See how you like it. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 13) * Executor should not be capitalized.
 * 14) **So should Prefect and Intendant not be either. De-capitalized Executors. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 15) ***In essence, you've nailed it; prefect and intendant are capitalized when used as titles or when referring to the Intendant caste.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 23:27, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 16) * "As a disciple of Yun-Harla, Ngaaluh was well-versed in subterfuge and intelligence, and it was simple for her, with an honest degree of piety, to locate the heretical movement thriving in the underlevels of re-shaped Coruscant." This sentence could perhaps be rewritten. In addition, please add a link to Yu'shaa immediately after.
 * 17) **Rewritten, link added. See if you like it. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 18) * The second paragraph of the Infiltration section needs to be rewritten for order and clarity.
 * 19) **I hope I've re-written the right paragraph, and I hope I've made it better. Have a look Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 20) * There seems to be a missing conjunction here "When one inquisition into Prefect Ash'ett of the Vishtu Sector was organized, Ngaaluh regarded the framing and discrediting of the Prefect as a chance to install a loyal heretic in his place; Anor was merely ridding himself of an old rival.".
 * 21) **Was re-worded with the rest of the paragraph. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 22) * "Ngaaluh was a fanatic who swore to give her life, and did so, for the movement in which she believed so passionately." could be rewritten a bit better, transposing the "and did so" clause to the end and tweaking it a bit.
 * 23) **Rewritten. See what you think. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 24) * The last sentence of the BtS section is a bit of a run-on.
 * 25) **(Hopefully) nailed it. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 26) *TIMMMMMMBERRRRRRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 21:07, 20 December 2007 (UTC)
 * 27) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 28) * The way you have written the BTS, there is little need to add the footnote ref tags. The mention of each novel in the relevant sentence(s) makes it unnecessary.
 * 29) **Removed the ref tags.
 * 30) *Other than that, it looks good. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.jpg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:38, 17 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) **Thanks for looking at it dude. Harrar 16:40, 18 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Image:AnorUnifyingforce2jc.jpg&mdash;what is this? --Imperialles 21:06, 23 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) *It's a picture of Nom Anor; I thought the article needed at least one picture and as there are none of Ngaaluh herself I put one of her manipulator in instead...anyway, I can remove if you want. I don't really understand your objection. Harrar 18:26, 24 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) **As it's from a Japanese cover, getting a better scan is not going to be easy, if that is your objection. --Eyrezer 00:05, 26 January 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) ***Pic removed --Eyrezer 22:54, 26 January 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Sadly there is no picture, and I'm not too sure about having Nom Anor in there&mdash;more of a way of breaking up the text. Good fun to write though (and sorry it's another character) :P Harrar 15:34, 16 December 2007 (UTC)
 * It's a pretty good article overall.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 21:07, 20 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Cheers and thanks for t'input. Harrar 14:33, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Heh, no problemo. Thanks for addressing my issues so quickly.-- Goodwood [[Image:Rebsymbol2.png|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 23:27, 21 December 2007 (UTC)
 * I have to skip this one, unfortunately. Reading through Force Heretic currently; spoilers. Graestan ( Talk ) 17:31, 25 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Do we have any information for an Early Life section, or at least something before 2.1? Hobbes ( Tiger's Lair ) 21:14, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry Hobbes but Ngaaluh's younger years are not touched upon - I believe she's supposed to be pretty youthful herself, and it's only the details that she's part of Harrar's entourage that stand out, among other things. I think to add it would call for a fair deal speculation, but tell me what you think. Harrar 12:35, 2 February 2008 (UTC)