Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Horzao Darr


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

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Support Oppose Just little things, I know. But i wholeheartedly agree with Greyman on an FAN for this article once it hits GA. Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 08:59, 15 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) As nominator. I've expanded this article from little more than a stub.  This is my first attempt at a Good Article, so all comments are appreciated. -  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 23:36, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Nicely done, though see my below comment :) Greyman  @wikiajanitor ( Talk ) 01:12, 13 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Now awaiting the FA nom for this article.  Darth Xadún ( Consult the Holocron ) 08:45, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Good to have another up-and-comer. Keep it up mate, you'll go far!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:14, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) I enjoyed reading it. I made a few minor fixes in grammar, so it's all good now. -- Joe Butler (Obi Maul12)   talk 00:26, 20 May 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the Holocrom of Xadún...
 * 2) * Intro second paragraph - strike 'still a military officer'. It's unnecessary as it's obvious he was if he was promoted again ;)
 * 3) **Reworded.
 * 4) * The first refernce to 'X-wings' in the 'Arrival of the Farstar' Section needs linking.
 * 5) **Linked. It was already linked to under the "strange aircraft" piped link, but it was an oblique reference.
 * 6) * Alter the last line, first paragraph to remove 'possible', or remove it altogether. Potential things aren't very encyclopediaic.
 * 7) **Removed. I was looking for a reason why didn't take the promotion, and it was a little speculatory based on available facts.

Comments
 * In my opinion, Cavalier One, you write quite well and have shown that you understand what it takes to write an article at this level. You demonstrate that you understand the Layout Guide, Manual of Style, and the Sourcing policy. Now, and remember that this is just a suggestion on my end, if I were you I would skip this stage of the game and go straight to the Featured article nomination page with this article :-) I believe that you would do quite well there with this article, and any others that you might write like this ;-) Cheers, Greyman  @wikiajanitor ( Talk ) 23:51, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Greyman, thank you for your comments, and the suggestion that this article could do well over on the FAN page. Part of me did consider whether or not to put this up for GA or FA, and I decided on this option since it is my first attempt at writing an article of this type, and I didn't want to run before I crawled so to speak.  I'll keep this nom here for the time being, and if it passes, I will put it up for FA per your suggestion if that is acceptable. -  Cavalier One ( Squadron channel ) 08:06, 13 May 2008 (UTC)