Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Tyria Sarkin Tainer


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Tyria Sarkin Tainer

 * Nominated by: Wildyoda 06:16, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: "Fit to fly, sir."

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Oppose Comments
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * "Her training allowed her to Tyria believed that it was possibly intermarriage" Awkward wording.
 * 3) **Think that was a copy-pasting error. Now corrected.
 * 4) * Link bombardment of Toprawa to appropriate battle.
 * 5) **Done.
 * 6) * Need also a link to some kind of Academy.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * Please consistently refer to the character as "Sarkin" or "Sarkin Tainer" throughout the article.
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) * The Ref template is unnecessary outside of the infobox/succession boxes. Please remove.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) *More detail on the Battle of Folor, please. Also, the capture of the Night Caller deserves more than two sentences.
 * 13) **In both of those situations, Tyria is barely mentioned. I'm at work and don't have the book in front of me, so I'll check as soon as I get home. But as I recall, she's not even mentioned by name at ALL in the entire set of chapters about the Battle of Folor, and just slightly more in the Night Caller capture. I intentionally left out descriptions of those because they get off-track from talking about Tyria herself, who had very little role in either.
 * 14) ***To help give you an example, I've given a buff to the Night Caller capture segment. I'd prefer there to be enough detail to have some specifics as to what was happening on a general squadron-level in such events, so at least the storyline is clear for the reader. The added context should, in the case of Folor, be perhaps a sentence or two&mdash;these are small detail objections, and I feel that overall, adding a bit more will help improve the informative nature of the article. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:21, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) *More detail on Sarkin's activities with the Wraiths on their early Night Caller raids, please.
 * 16) **Again, information on Tyria is scarce in the source material. Do you still want general information about the missions?
 * 17) ***Same as above, minor detail objection&mdash;a sentence or two more explaining them would be nice, if only to show Sarkin's participation in the missions. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:21, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) * Please refer to Grinder by last name. Same with Kell.
 * 19) **Done.
 * 20) *Those are some preliminaries. Fix 'em and I'll continue with my review. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 16:53, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) **All corrected except the "details" ones that I want a little more input on first. Wildyoda 22:20, 11 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) *I believe that the canonical usage is Night Caller, not "the Night Caller". Please check, and correct if necessary.
 * 23) *More detail on the simulation that convinces Donos to break out of his fugue. Specifics, please.
 * 24) *Some more quotes would be good. ;-) This is Allston, shouldn't be that hard to find some good ones.
 * 25) *You'll need to contextify Darillian and the Night Caller charade since that was not clearly outlined earlier.
 * 26) *Contextify Tabanne on first mention.
 * 27) *Wow. More detail needed on Battle of Ession. Not to mention Talasea. Link for Ession also. Remember that her role as part of the greater squadron is also important, and not just her specific actions in each engagement. Please double the coverage of those two events.
 * 28) *Finished with the X-wing: Wraith Squadron stuff. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 17:30, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) You need to source the succession boxes. --Eyrezer 02:02, 23 February 2009 (UTC)

Vote to remove nomination (Inq only)
 * 1) Outstanding objections from February 11, with no work done. I mentioned it to Wildyoda a week ago, and while he said he'd get onto it, there has been no change so far. I therefore feel it better to remove now, and it can be renommed at a later date if necessary. --Eyrezer 06:57, 30 March 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) There will be no bargain, young Jedi. I shall enjoy watching you die. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:24, 1 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) If it's been on that long with nothing. - Lord Hydronium(Oya!) 23:26, 1 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Per above. -  Cavalier One [[Image:FarStar Logo.jpg|20px]]( Squadron channel ) 01:06, 4 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Unfortunately. I would've happily voted for this one once stuff was fixed.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:49, 4 April 2009 (UTC)