Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Tedonian wine


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Tedonian wine

 * Nominated by: Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 00:15, September 16, 2011 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:Continuing with the Get-all-my-created-articles-to-status project.

(2 ECs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:42, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 2) I have Tedonian wine with my nerf-steak thank you...-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg  (Greetings)  23:12, September 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) Menkooroo 08:48, October 21, 2011 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Rubedo
 * 2) * "be as careful with the shipments of Tedonian wine as Tohrm was." Rephrase this. It's word-for-word.
 * 3) **Try that then.
 * 4) ***It's still pretty much the phrase. You should give Tohrm context as their comrade, rather than providing his species. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:24, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Try that.
 * 6) *****I changed it a touch more. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 04:42, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 7) * I think the mention of the Tedonia system should be relegated to a BTS note a la the previous food articles. Unless she says it comes from there, in which case it needs to be entioned in the body.
 * 8) **See how that looks.
 * 9) ***I meant saying something to the effect of that there is canonically a system called Tedonia but that Allies does not explicitly say that the wine originated from there. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:24, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 10) ****See how that works then. Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 04:12, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 11) * Tohrm should be given context on his first mention, which could be fixed with my first objection.
 * 12) **Check it out.
 * 13) *This is just a question. So Ackmena was in an anti-slavery organization when she was one hundred years old? ?.? NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 02:38, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 14) **When one hundred years old you reach, look as good you will not. Hmm?? Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 02:44, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 15) ***The writers officially need to be told to remember scale. People shouldn't be having kids at 70. It's just ridiculous. NaruHina  Talk Anakinsolo.png 03:24, September 18, 2011 (UTC)
 * 16) Exiled Jedi
 * 17) *Do we know for sure that this was a real kind of wine? -- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  22:50, September 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 18) **I think that it can be safely assumed. Since the Flight people were trying to keep the conversation inconspicuous, I think that they would use the name of a real wine. Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 23:00, September 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 19) ***Good point.-- Exiled Jedi  Oldrepublic crest.svg (Greetings)  23:12, September 22, 2011 (UTC)
 * 20) * If the Tedonia system was added to the Online Companion after the publication of Allies, then there's more you can say in the BTS without venturing into speculative territory.
 * 21) **Umm, I'm not sure what exactly you want added. Do you want the release date for the Atlas? Release date for the Companion? Just more about what it says about Tedonia? Or what?-- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 13:59, October 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Jason and Dan have been consistently updating the Online Companion for the past couple of years as new material is released. In real-world chronology, the "Tedonia system" was added to the online companion following the release of Allies. You're right in that we still can't say for sure that Tedonian wine comes from said system, but the BTS could note that the Tedonia system came into existence after the introduction of Tedonian wine. Something as small as changing "is included in" to "was later added to" would do the trick, I think. Thoughts? Menkooroo 04:56, October 20, 2011 (UTC)
 * 23) ****Sounds good. Added.-- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 16:40, October 20, 2011 (UTC)
 * 24) * Check out the info I added on where and when the conversation took place. Be sure to include those kinds of details in the future. Menkooroo 05:09, October 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 25) **Okey-dokey. Thanks for the review.-- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 13:59, October 19, 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) **Okey-dokey. Thanks for the review.-- Cal Jedi Infinite Empire.svg (Personal Comm Channel) 13:59, October 19, 2011 (UTC)

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