Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Douglas III

Douglas III

 * Nominated by: Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:39, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

Support

 * 1) Jackelopes! Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:36, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) Clean. Nice work. --Imperialles 12:51, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 18:00, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:51, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Nicely done.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 00:08, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Hooray for Michael Douglas! Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 16:46, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) Belated vote. Great read. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 16:49, May 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Fixed 2 reference tags in the infobox, everything else looks nice.  TK-299  (Click Here) Imperial_Emblem.svg 11:54, May 24, 2010 (UTC)

Xicer9

 * Just one: Could you list and source the planet's orbital position in the infobox? Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:13, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Done. I've also added the Outer Rim to the infobox's "Region" field in addition to the Centrality while I was at it. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:21, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Actually, I have a question about that. The Atlas Online Companion lists the Centrality as the the planet's sector, so shouldn't the Centrality be listed in the infobox's "sector" parameter? Or is the Online Companion mistaken in calling the Centrality a sector? Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 05:29, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Haha, I'm glad you brought this up, because I was thinking the exact same thing. My original rationale was that every source I've used for this article, except the Online Companion, calls the Centrality a "region," and we currently categorize it as such, but clearly all Atlas material treats it akin to a sector. So yeah, it's probably best to organize it as a sector for our purposes. Change made. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:33, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

Farl:

 * Description: Why "Nevertheless"? What's the relation between both sentences? Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:36, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * I think the connection is pretty self-explanatory. On one hand the planet is said to be of little interest to the rest of the galaxy, but at the same time it's famous and notoriously known for its hostile wildlife. I feel "nevertheless" is used appropriately. If you have another suggestion, please lay it on me. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:31, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

Chack Jadson

 * "While the jackelope ultimately made it back for his collection, Douglas himself did not." I don't understand this sentence. Are you saying that he killed it, and sent it back, but didn't return himself?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:17, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, the source doesn't elaborate in any more specific terms than that. The original sentence only reads, "The jackelope made it back for his collection, although Mendel himself did not." I tried to avoid coming to any conclusion that isn't spelled out for us exactly, which unfortunately required me to stay pretty close to the original wording. Douglas may have died, he may have shipped his catch back, who knows. I agree it's a bit confusing, but that's what it says. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:31, May 20, 2010 (UTC)

Jonjedigrandmaster

 * You need to either change the "had been" to "was," or say by when it had been made famous, because using "had been" changes the tense to past perfect, which has to be used in relation to another event/time: "Far from the Galactic Core and of little interest to the rest of the galaxy, Douglas III had been made famous by the game hunter Mendel Douglas&hellip;" Otherwise, good work as usual. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 03:03, May 22, 2010 (UTC)
 * Heh, sure. Fixed. Thanks for the review. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:58, May 22, 2010 (UTC)