Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations

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 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;not be the object of any ongoing edit wars.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic and can be used for the front page featured box.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks and none in the introduction.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information from all sources and appearances, especially a biography for character articles.
 * 10) &hellip;not have been previously featured on the Main Page. Otherwise, it can only be restored to featured status.
 * 11) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 12) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 13) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article. A leading quote at the beginning of the article will be required only if there is quotable dialogue by or about the subject. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 14) &hellip;include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "powers and abilities" section on all relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of good quality if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;pass review by the Inquisitorius review panel.
 * 18) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 1000 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc).

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 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of featured status, putting it at the bottom of the list below; see criteria above. Note that a previously featured article cannot be featured on the Main Page again; however, it can be restored to featured status.
 * 2) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 3) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.
 * 4) The article is placed on the featured article list and added to the front page queue.
 * 5) Also, if, at least a week after the article's nomination, that article has 5 Inquisitor supports and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), it will be added to the queue, and will be officially known as a "featured article."

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 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterwards, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved. Please cite which rule your objection falls under! Failure to do so will result in your objection being considered invalid.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors.
 * 5) Once all objectors' complaints have been solved (or the article has five supporting Inquisitor votes and no objections after at least a week), the article will be added to the queue and be officially known as a "featured article."

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(0 Inq/1 Users/1 Total)
Support
 * 1) Major issues listed here have been addressed. Yrfeloran 06:16, 21 March 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *You've done a nice job, Yrfeloran, making some major additions to this article. Unfortunately, it's still quite a ways away from being up to FA standards. Without even reading through, I pick up on the following problems:
 * 3) * The infobox must be completely sourced, as does the succession box at the bottom of the page.
 * 4) **Done. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***Complete sourcing includes sourcing the "Era(s)" field. I've done this for you, but please source this next time. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:44, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Any quotes within the article must go at the beginning of sections, after the subhead, not in the middle of paragraphs.
 * 7) **Most of those were residual old paragraphs - done. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *The entire article is little more than 1-2 sentence paragraphs summarizing events. While I'm certainly not a huge prequel trilogy fan, having never read the majority of these sources, this tells me that you've done just that, quickly generalizing important topics while skipping out on juicy details. Featured Articles must be comprehensive, not only including material from all relevant sources, but also detailing that information to a great degree. An article like Dooku, for as much information is out there on him, should have dozens of paragraphs several sentences in length. It's just too thin right now. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:50, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ** There was a formatting issue with some prior authors' styles, which I've now fixed. It now "looks better". As for actual content, there have been significant expansions and section mergings. Dooku's article over the period of the movies was probably more in-depth than recently re-FAd Grievous, for instance, even before I revamped it. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) LtNOWIS
 * 11) * Image:Quarren league.jpg, Image:DookuVSGrievous.jpg, and Image:DookuBTS.jpg need more specific sources. The Clone Wars shots need to specify which episodes, and the databank shot needs a link to the page it's from. -LtNOWIS 10:19, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) **Muuuuuurgh helped with this. Thanks, Muuuuuurgh! Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 14) * Needs a longer and more comprehensive intro.
 * 15) ** Intro has been expanded somewhat. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * I won't get specific, but it's way too light on detail. Most of the article is just short paragraph, then a new section.
 * 17) *This can be brought to FA, but it will take a lot of time and commitment. If you can do it, I commend you.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 11:30, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) More stuff from me:
 * 19) * Both Sith Apprentice and Leaving the Order have paragrpahs that are no more than one or two sentences. Combine sentences in those sections or expand them.
 * 20) **Combination and expansion done Yrfeloran 06:34, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Combine the sections Jedi confrontation and successful escape.
 * 22) **Done Yrfeloran 06:34, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) * You link way too much. Link onc ein the intro and then once in the body.
 * 24) **This was kind of inevitable, since the original article was overlinked and additions were made piecemeal. I think I've pruned about all of them Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) * De-link the quote in Endgame.
 * 26) **Done Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Remove the sentence about Quinlan Vos in the Legacy section.
 * 28) **done Yrfeloran 02:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) *I am very impressed with what you've done so far. Keep up the good work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 13:48, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) From the legal pad scrawling of Atarumaster88
 * 31) * Lot of short paragraphs need fleshed out or combined with others.
 * 32) **I've done a fair bit of this. Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * I'd say remove some of the shorter sections by combining them with others also.
 * 34) ** And a lot of section combining Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * Compare your appearances/sources list to the reference list. A quick check reveals no information from the following:
 * 36) ** Star Wars: Battlefront
 * 37) ** Some of those HoloNet news.
 * 38) ** Boba Fett: Crossfire
 * 39) ** Republic 49.
 * 40) ** Legacy of the Jedi
 * 41) ** And I'm sure there are more.
 * 42) ***Most of those were actually there - Legacy was ref'd 8 times, Crossfire and 49 were there but cited as Fight to Survive and 50. I did some expansion on the HNN stuff and added Battlefront. Yrfeloran 03:00, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) *Needs a non-canon appearance section. (Ugh)
 * 44) **I'm probably going to need help with this one. I've got the bare bones of one up. Yrfeloran 04:18, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 45) ***I see most of them done. Is there additional information in the LEGO video games that's not there yet? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:22, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * Properly reference all Clone Wars cartoon series references by chapter.
 * 47) **Done for all IU refs Yrfeloran 03:35, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) *It's a lot better than it was, but still will need work, as others have already said. Feel free to drop by WP:NEGTC for additional help, though, or my talk page. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 23:27, 24 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) From the full-fledged desk of Atarumaster88
 * 50) * Dooku's role in Jedi:Shaak Ti could use mention.
 * 51) **OK, it's got a mention Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) * Same thing with Republic 54.
 * 53) **Somebody who's read this in the past year definitely needs to double-check, but added. Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) * I'm not seeing any information from the Shadowfeed.
 * 55) **Added Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 56) ***<There are three or four Shadowfeed appearances in the appearance list, but only 1 reference that I saw. Did you get them all?
 * 57) ****There's one trivial one, and the fragment of a Fete day address that doesn't have much content besides "we're awesome, Republic sucks" Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) * Mention Dooku's role in the Battle of Jabiim.
 * 59) **mentioned Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) * Check also Republic 59, 60, and 61. I forget whether those have key mentions.
 * 61) ** They don't, but I added 64 Yrfeloran 00:58, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 62) * Yoda's lesson to Dooku in EGTTF might be good P&T material.
 * 63) ** I was thinking about doing that, but it's hard to wedge it in. He's like 7, too. Yrfeloran 04:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 64) ***Added an oblique mention in Childhood Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 65) * Your EGTTF refs, at least, are all off and are seemingly removing content from the article.There's a sentence or two missing from his tutelage under Cerulian. When you reference, your first reference to a source should like like, but your subsequent references should only include to avoid errors. And also, the field of , the blah part is just a placeholder and so you can abbreviate to shorten the code, just keep it understandable.
 * 66) **The Thame stuff was due to a different malformed reference that I fixed. I'll trim some of these as I come across them, but with the amount of paragraph merging/etc. going around it is really useful as an editor in this particular situation to have more than one ref linked. Also "blah" should be full source name per Layout Guide, which I agree with. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 67) ***Heh, I stand corrected. Though the use of abbreviated referencing is sorta common. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 68) ****Yeah, there's some legacy ones on the Dooku page, but on an article this size when you're editing a section at a time it's a -massive- pain to look up what the page's nickname of the source you want is. Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 69) * All your references have the same error, it appears.
 * 70) * " Though Dooku's behavior and beliefs as a Jedi had previously been within the scope of Jedi orthodoxy,[1] there is evidence that in the period before he left the Order he flirted with the belief that the dark side of the Force could be called upon without personal corruption.[17]." This sentence is OOU and should be rewritten to conform with the MoS. At the very least, the tense is wrong.
 * 71) **Fixed I guess. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 72) * Lot of short sentences in the last paragraph of "Leaving the Order".
 * 73) **Made some a little longer? Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 74) * Need context on Palpatine. His double identity as Darth Sidious is not discussed, and the casual reader may not be awareof that.
 * 75) **Added this. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 76) * OOU/tense issues with this: "It is suspected that Dooku himself did this, but it is unclear how he accomplished it." also. Recall that EGTTF is an IU publication, if that helps.
 * 77) ** Fixed Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 78) * Jumps back and forth about his Sith status. He's supposed to be a Sith Lord in "Sith apprentice" but his Sith training is still ongoing during the Bando Gora episode. Clarify please.
 * 79) ** Noncontradictory. One becomes an apprentice first, then learns Sith stuff. See Vader. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 80) ***You have him listed as a "fully-fledged Sith Lord", not as a Sith apprentice, and then went on to later discuss his training.
 * 81) **** OK, removed the adjective Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 82) * 2nd paragraph of "Moving the pieces" could use a more varied sentence syntax.
 * 83) **fiddled with Yrfeloran 02:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 84) * "To the surprise of both parties, Dooku himself was present". Present where? Needs more context.
 * 85) ** Added context Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 86) * More context needed on initial mention of Vos and Secura.
 * 87) ** Added a little bit here. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 88) * More context needed on Ansion's alliances and Dooku's manipulations there.
 * 89) ** Added Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 90) * "The Jedi Obi-Wan Kenobi then traced Jango back to his home on the planet Kamino. Kenobi found Jango Fett there, and also discovered the clone army that Dooku had once ordered. This army was now fully grown and ready for action." Condense this, but give some more context in general on Episode II. The Jedi rescue force in particular.
 * 91) ** OK, did a little more context.
 * 92) * Be specific about some Episode II details. List the factions involved in the CIS. List the creatures in the arena.
 * 93) ** Done, though the CIS stuff inevitably comes across as a little listy.
 * 94) * In general, it is not advisable to use the first names of characters. A few exceptions might include major characters, but not, say, Zam Wesell.
 * 95) ** OK Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 96) * More detail on arena battle and Dooku's role in it.
 * 97) ** Uh, OK, added that he watched from the balcony :P Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 98) * 2nd para of "The clones attack" is all short sentences.
 * 99) ** fiddled with Yrfeloran 02:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 100) * "spectacular duel" is POV.
 * 101) ** fixed Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 102) * Sev'rance Tann's role in Dooku's escape from Geonosis, as well as the Dark Acolytes blocking Windu in their tanks should be mentioned.
 * 103) ** Like Padme falling out of the gunship, I don't think this is really directly relevant to Dooku's article. Yrfeloran 01:26, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 104) ***I'll accept the explanation on the tanks, but I think Sev'rance Tann's role as the chief commander of the droid armies could use some explanation, and that ties in well with her role in helping Dooku escape. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 105) ****I added a little more context with Tann in the proper section. Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 106) *You're about halfway to my ending catchphrase, but I think there's plenty here for now. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:26, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 107) " Even as the Separatist movement grew and coalesced around Dooku as a leader, the Jedi Council did not believe he could be behind the violence.[24] although he". I think your reference is eating some of your text here.
 * 108) **fixed Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 109) * 3 short paragraphs in "A new ally" could use merging.
 * 110) ** I did a little bit of addition, but I think merging those paragraphs would hurt more than it'd help Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 111) * More context needed on "Sidious said that it did not matter either way.".
 * 112) ** Added Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 113) * This is related to above, but Tann's role and actions are never explained properly in relation to Dooku.
 * 114) **Tried to address this Yrfeloran 00:49, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 115) * Again, check your linking. A lot of things are overlinked, but don't worry too much about it; that can be corrected automatically.
 * 116) * The first name thing is fine with say, Anakin and Obi-Wan as long as it's not overrused, but certainly not with minor characters. Nothing you haven't seen before. ;-)
 * 117) ** I'll fix it as I go, but not for, say, Tallisibeth Enwandung-Esterhazy Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 118) ***Spoilsport. :-P Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:22, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 119) * Just a general suggestion: Try reading the article aloud to see how it flows. Parts of it don't read that well, and a few small tweaks would fix those.
 * 120) * The section title "Miscellaneous villainy" needs reworded. Dare I say it doesn't sound encyclopediac?
 * 121) **Unencyclopediac...but -so- true. OK, reworded. Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 122) * These two don't flow well together: "Droids planted charges on the planet and prepared for detonation. The Separatist-allied inhabitents of Viidaav would have also been killed."
 * 123) **Reworded whole section Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 124) * "Miscellaneous villainy" has a large number of short paragraphs and the content is disjointed. Let the prose flow within you.
 * 125) **It's hard. Mostly random CWA stuff. Gave it a shot Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 126) * Short paragraphs in meeting on Vjun.
 * 127) **Did some work there. Yrfeloran 03:14, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 128) *" She had previously been defeated and humiliated by Anakin Skywalker on Coruscant.[61] However, a Republic fleet arrived before the process was completed." These two have no tie-in, and don't flow well together either.
 * 129) **Added more context Yrfeloran 01:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 130) * Last paragraph on Saleucami needs more context, or give background on the battle more towards the beginning. Either way.
 * 131) **done Yrfeloran 01:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 132) * "Sidious also ordered Grievous to attack Coruscant and simultaneously to the Separatist assault on Tythe." Clarify this sentence.
 * 133) **did so Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 134) * "General Grievous was unaware that his hapless captive was also the feared mastermind behind the Confederation. Dooku arrived on the Invisible Hand and took charge of the prisoner." These two sentences don't flow well together.
 * 135) **Tried to segue better Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 136) * Link the Invisible Hand.
 * 137) **It was linked in the first mention Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 138) * Link to the saber forms and even provide some context on them if you feel it would be good.
 * 139) **I'd prefer not to, having just rescued the article from an unhealthy obsession with Makashi. I have some in the lightsaber training section, but it needs to stay out of the ROTS fight or else it will morph into "Ataru beat Makashi" instead of "Anakin beat Dooku". Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 140) ***Fair enough. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 19:35, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 141) *" In a burst of power, Anakin overpowered Dooku". The power of the sentence is a mite overwhelming.
 * 142) **did some rewording Yrfeloran 04:54, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 143) * Remove the section header "Revelation". It's unnecessary and interrupts the events on Invisible Hand
 * 144) **OK....I did this, but I'm not sure I'm happy with it. Lose "Kill him now" quote, for one. Yrfeloran 05:34, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 145) * Redlinks. Waaaay too many.
 * 146) **Down to three now Yrfeloran 04:58, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 147) *Keep working on it. Chances are that this'll go through a couple more reviews, but don't give up; this has potential. Have a Super Terrific Friendly-Unfrustrating Day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 21:11, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 148) From the squalid cublicle of Graestan (Part One):
 * 149) *Abbreviating the ref names would be most helpful in an article of such scope.
 * 150) **I abbreviated prime offender Essential Guide to the Force, but most everything else is linked only a few times. Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 151) *More thorough and consistent linking is desired.
 * 152) *POV-ish statements abound. "Legendary" and "vastly overmatched" in particular. I suggest going over the article, seeking out anything that isn't inherently neutral or makes value judgments not specifically established by canon.
 * 153) *It's pretty thoroughly established precedent in featured articles that aside from a few whole-name mentions, last names are to be used except in instances of multiple individuals mentioned in the article having the same last name. Please look through and change accordingly; I've already done a bit of Jinning Qui-Gons.
 * 154) *"Building from this foundation" doesn't really sit well with me.
 * 155) **I've rephrased this whole section Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 156) *Calling Cerulian a historian and then stating that his interests were in history is a bit redundant.
 * 157) **See above Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 158) *"Historically knowledgeable and politically apt" implies that he had a history of being knowledgeable and was apt for political reasons. Please rephrase; a shame, that was a pretty one.
 * 159) **See above Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 160) *"Dooku and Qui-Gon were forced to surrender to the pirates when Colicoid Eradicator droids threatened the factory's child workers, and were injected with toxins that paralyzed them and rendered them unconscious." – Clarify who has what done. Also, give a little explanation of motivations.
 * 161) **The scene itself is a little confusing - it's unclear who they surrendered too, and it's unclear who injected the, I did some cleanup Yrfeloran 22:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 162) *More later. Thanks for your time. Graestan ( Talk ) 17:53, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Former featured article. Yrfeloran 06:16, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I am happy to see someone tackle this and I would encourage you, Yrfeloran, to hack away at it. For what it's worth, I recall (several months ago) noticing that numerous chunks of fanon and fan speculation had made their way into this article, so as the revision process continues, I'd recommend proceeding suspiciously, never assuming that a source tag is legit unless yourself added or checked it. (I haven't even really looked at it yet, though, so for all I know somebody already cleansed it.)  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 12:39, 21 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I did a good deal of the sourcing myself, and have spot-checked most of the rest. There was a serious fanon/NPOV purge that I did, and the non-biographical sections are now shorter. Yrfeloran 22:47, 23 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Note to self: Done up to Clone Wars. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:26, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Small input from Tinwe, concerning the lightsaber Dooku used as a Jedi: I'd like to point you to the direction of this image. It shows that Dooku used the curve-hilt design already as a Padawan (I'm not 100% sure if this is his own saber or just another training saber&mdash;though at least I have never seen a curve-hilted one). Whatever the case, I think it deserves to be mentioned in the article. --Tinwe 16:09, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * There's a mention in the continuity section of the BtS. As a book cover, the Legacy of the Jedi cover is not really canon. Especially since there's no scene with young Dooku wielding his own saber in the actual book, and the whole montage is kinda, IMHO, poorly done. Yrfeloran 00:49, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I could use some more feedback on this(objections or votes). I'd be happy to address any concerns with the article. Yrfeloran 01:51, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated. I started out expecting this to be a GA due to limited content available, but I found I was able to put together a pretty decent entry that exceeded 1,000 words, so here it is in FA. --Colinmcev 05:42, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) The Colinmcev train rolls on. ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:30, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:03, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:00, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) EVIL motherf*cker.  Graestan ( Talk ) 14:18, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Forgot to vote. Green Tentacle (Talk) 12:54, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 17:37, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Please elaborate on why he fled the battle. Did his forces lose? Was he scared off by Skywalker? "Weir fled the battle and ordered his men to pull back to their transport ships"
 * 3) **Done. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * This is a tad confusing. You say he was being pursued by Numb, but then Numb is hiding out in a canyon? Please clarify: "He quickly detected that the Sullustan Ten Numb had pursued him on a speeder bike and, as his men were preparing to leave, Weir personally climbed the canyon mountain to where Numb was hiding"
 * 5) **Done. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Please clarify whose blaster he used here. Seems like he used Numb's: "Weir personally climbed the canyon mountain to where Numb was hiding and captured him by knocking him unconscious with his blaster rifle"
 * 7) **It was Weir's gun. Added the reference. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Bah, it was fine how it was. I've changed it back. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:22, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * This sentence doesn't make sense to me. The led the Rebel fighters by attacking a convoy? Please clarify/elaborate on what's going on: "which escaped a pursuit from Rogue Squadron by leading the Rebel X-wing and A-wing starfighters by attacking a civilian convoy with suicide drone TIEs."
 * 10) **Yeah, something went a little wrong there. I think some of my proofreading changes might not have made it in due to some of the bug problems I was having the day I nominated it. I cleaned it up and tried to clarify. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Please reword to avoid ending subsequent clauses with the same word: "including sizes and secret locations of military forces, which could be used in strikes against the Rebel forces"
 * 12) **Got it. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) * So, Weir took Numb back to Tralus to be interrogated? Please specify This sentence makes me question this: "Upon learning that Luke Skywalker and the Rogues found the secret base due"
 * 14) **I put a reference to it right before the torture stuff. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) * I'm kind of skeptical as to describing R2-D2 as famous here. Can you confirm that the source does indeed say this, or even source this to something else? "and the famed astromech droid R2-D2,"
 * 16) **I just dropped the famed reference altogether. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) * In the paragraph beginning, "As Wedge Antilles and Tycho Celchu pursued the general in stolen TIE Fighters...," you use the word "surface" three times in two sentences, including twice in a single sentence. Please reword, ideally, two of these.
 * 18) **So, you want me to use the word surface more. You got it! (Kidding, by the way ;) ). --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * Just confirming. There's nothing else explaining what happened after he was captured and brought to interrogation?
 * 20) **Unfortunately, no. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) * Please reword to avoid using the base word "regard" twice here: "Regardless of species, Weir showed little regard"
 * 22) **Done. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) ***You've only changed "little" to "no." Specifically, I'm looking for you to reword one either "Regardless" or "regard." Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:22, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) ****lol, Oops. Fixed. --Colinmcev 00:10, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 25) * I'm confused as to how telling Numb that his torture was the product of a chance encounter is considered psychological torture: "Weir enjoyed applying psychological attacks against his subjects, such as his statements to Ten Numb that his capture and torture was the result of a purely chance encounter."
 * 26) **He said something to the affect that the mission was only meant to punish Coronet City and that they didn't even know Luke and the pilots would be there, so it was only based on pure chance that they even found Numb, and yet now he was being tortured because of it. I found it a bit difficult to condense though, and really I think there were other better psychological torments to use as an example, so I changed the sentence altogether. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Through the third and fourth paragraphs of the P&T section, you begin off a number of sentences with "Weir was..." Please reword some of these.
 * 28) **Done. --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * I would like to see a little cleaner BTS. It's not bad, all the information is just about there, but please rewrite to more effectively say who created him and what comics he appears in. Also make sure to identify the year the comics were published. If possible, you might add why he was created. What purpose did his character serve? Antagonist? Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:25, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) **What do you think of it now? --Colinmcev 14:24, 26 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) ***Very nice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:22, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) Lil' bit more:
 * 33) * I would still like a little bit here explaining how, even though they apparently satisfied his taste for destruction, they still didn't get Skywalker: "Weir ordered the deaths of Skywalker and anyone who stood with him, military and civilian alike."
 * 34) **Changed this around a bit. Let me know what you think. --Colinmcev 00:10, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) ***Cleaned it up a bit, but that's fine. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:30, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) * The little blurb you've selected for its own section in the "Talents and abilities" section isn't really enough to warrant an individual section. Please move that into the P&T.
 * 37) **Got it.
 * 38) * Also, just a reminder, still one unresolved objection above. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:22, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) **Got it. --Colinmcev 00:10, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Er, the "legion" quote is used twice. I'm hoping this wasn't intentional. -- Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:53, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) **Nope, it wasn't. Fixed. I think I just copied the quote up there for the template and intended to replace the actual quote. I fixed it. --Colinmcev 22:16, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 3) * It's been a little while since I've read this particular issue of Rogue Squadron, but is Weir stated to be a storm commando?
 * 4) **I looked back and didn't find a specific reference (the storm commando reference was already in the article when I started editing). I still felt and feel that it's safe to call him that, since he not only wears the uniform (if a guy is wearing an Imperial Stormtrooper outfit, but isn't specifically identified as a stormtrooper, you can still tell he's a stormtrooper), but also because he demonstrates a lot of the skills and missions of the storm commandos; namely, from our article, to "instill uprisings and subdue insurrections, which is very similar to what he was doing here. I'm hoping you'll agree and that I can leave the detail in, but if you really think it has to go I'll drop it. --Colinmcev 02:11, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ***I hate to be nitpicky, but the word "storm commando" is not in the comics, so I wince at the idea of leaving it in the article, knowing that our readers may take (and should take, when it comes to FAs) our articles as 100% accurate and canon, etc. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:32, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) ****For the record, you could always say in one part of the article that Weir wore armor similar in appearance to storm commando armor if you wanted to have some mention of it, but certainly not a requirement. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:00, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ****Well, I still couldn't disagree more, but I guess that's that. Removed all references. --Colinmcev 03:06, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Correct me if I'm wrong; I don't think we generally cite by issue, but by story arc.
 * 9) **I don't know what the precedent is, but whatever it is, I'll be happy to follow it. I just did it this way because I figured the more specific I was with the issues, the more accurate the article would be, but you can feel free to change it or instruct me and I'll do so.
 * 10) ***I checked a few other FAs and found they were referenced by story arc, not issue, just as you said. I changed it accordingly. --Colinmcev 16:02, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ****Personally, I prefer citing by issue if we can for the reasons Colinmcev said. But if this is going to be done by story arc, then it's single source and the references need to be removed entirely. Green Tentacle (Talk) 19:55, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) *****I'm down with whatever; obviously I agree with Green Tentacle but I'll go with whatever direction you guys want to give. Atarumaster, since you made the objection, I'll go with whatever direction you want. Or if other inqs want to weigh in, that's cool too. --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ******The article Jon is a one-source FA that references it like I do this one. Is this correct or do I have to make a change? --Colinmcev 03:06, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *******As far as I know, it's fine to leave the references in. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 03:52, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) *Some minor little things cleaned up, but that's about it. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:13, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) Image objections:
 * 17) * Image:Weir.JPG: Quite distorted.
 * 18) **This image is actually not distorted; its deliberately dark and a bit off in the comic itself to make Weir look as evil and creepy as possible. This picture was here before I got to the article, but looking at it again in the comic, I can honestly say I don't think another scan could make it clearer. --Colinmcev 04:57, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) ***As you probably saw in other objections, I've done some additional work and cropping on this picture. Hopefully it's all better now. --Colinmcev 20:57, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * Image:Weir.jpg: Even more distorted.
 * 21) **Rescanned and reuploaded. --Colinmcev 04:57, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * Image:Weirtorturingten.jpg: Could probably be cropped a little better to remove more of the white frame at the top.
 * 23) **Done. --Colinmcev 04:57, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Image:Wedgepunchweir.jpg: Needs to be cropped. The frame line is showing on the top left side, and the top right side seems &hellip;bent somehow.
 * 25) **I previously avoided that crop so Weir's whole hand would be in there, but I did the crop and reuploaded. --Colinmcev 04:57, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * --Imperialles 18:51, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 2) * No better image for the infobox, sans comic frames?
 * 3) **Honestly, there really isn't a better picture of Weir. The comic frames thing is a bit unfortunate, but most of the other pictures of his face are either less adequate or similarly obscured. Plus, this image is the first time we see Weir without the mask, it's our intro to him and I think it really nails his sadistic nature. That all being said, I'm proficient enough in Photoshop that I could remove the comic frames on the top of this image and replace them with a standard white background, but I didn't know if that was allowed or not. If it is, let me know and I'd be happy to do it. --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***It's been done. I'd like it. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:48, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****What do you think of it? --Colinmcev 03:06, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Category:Images of Weir could be populated with, say, the rest of the article's images.
 * 7) **Whoops. Haha. The other images are in that category now. --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Not so keen on "Bald" as a hair color.
 * 9) **I changed it to None. Is that better? Or is hair color removed altogether in these cases? --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * "Torturous" is being used a bit much.
 * 11) **I only found the word used twice. The word torture is used more, but I didn't feelt it was overused, especially considering that torture is such a big part of what Weir is all about. If maybe you could give me some suggestions of instances where you feel it should be removed or reworded, I can go from there? --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Basically, I found that in such a short article, using it twice in the exact same way and pipe-linking it both times was a bit heavy-handed. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:48, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) ****Ok. Removed one. --Colinmcev 03:06, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Weir was a storm commando, an elite branch&hellip;" – Please reword.
 * 15) **I see what you mean. What do you think of the change I made? --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) ***Say he was a member of the storm commandos or something. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:48, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) ****Due to atarumaster's objections, this reference has been removed altogether anyway, so I think this is resolved. --Colinmcev 03:06, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * "After the Battle of Endor and the death of Emperor Palpatine in 4 ABY, Weir started a counter-Rebellion movement to interfere with the Rebel Alliance as it attempted to transition into the New Republic and establish itself as the dominant form of government in the galaxy." – A bit ponderous; please break up.
 * 19) **Done. Let me know what you think. --Colinmcev 04:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * I don't exactly agree with the concept that Coronet City ceased to be a booming metropolis during the Empire. Please rephrase and clarify.
 * 21) **I changed it. Just so you know where I'm coming fro, the dialogue from the comic as they walk through the busy streets is: "Last time I was here. The city was gripped in fear. Nobody even left their houses at night...it was a city in total lockdown." "Looks like all the locks have been broken."
 * 22) ***Even changing "booming" to "bustling" would work. Graestan ( Talk ) 01:48, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) ****Done. --Colinmcev 03:06, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Explain the help from Leyli and R2 a bit; it reads like a loose end.
 * 25) **Done.
 * 26) * Graestan ( Talk ) 03:00, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I am aware that the Discussion and Quotes page links are redlinks right now, and that the summary info for the two pictures I scanned are missing. When I put this entry together, for some odd reason, Wookieepedia wouldn't let me create any new pages, so I couldn't add any of these things. I have the stuff saved in a TXT file, so I'll try again in a day or so and hopefully it will be resolved. --Colinmcev 05:42, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Also, for some remarkably frustrating reason, I found that every time I tried to edit a single section, as opposed to the entire article, it removed my entry entry, reverted to the old one, and showed no sign of my previous edits in my contributions or in the history. I have copy and pasted my entry into a TXT file and saved it in case this happens again. I imagine this is just some temporary bug that is probably fixed by the time you are reading this, but just in case, maybe if you edit something you can edit the whole article, not just a section? --Colinmcev 05:54, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I haven't forgotten about this, Colin, just been hunting for the appropriate sources to check on Weir's status as storm commando. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:32, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/3 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated.--Colinmcev 06:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Ebola? Nah!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 21:05, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 01:29, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:04, 4 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) A nice original idea for an article. Great work Colin --Eyrezer 06:13, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Wonderfully well-written article. Excellent job, Colin. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:57, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:01, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Forest of Goodwood
 * 2) * Introduction should be merged into one paragraph; also, the last subsection of it needs to be rewritten for accuracy (the Vratix is a species of insectoid, not a medicine)
 * 3) **Although you're obviously 100% correct on the Vratix thing (that was just a typo, now fixed), I really don't think one giant paragraph is the answer here. I agree with Lord Hydronium; the lack of a picture on the side makes them look shorter than they are. Any chance you might change your mind on that objection? --Colinmcev 04:33, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Could you at least merge either the first two or last two paragraphs? Also, "it was eventually eradicated the Vratix, a bacta-producing medicine from Thyferra, which combined bacta and ryll kor to develop rylca," is still incorrect.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****I did some expanding to the intro. Let me know if you think it's better. --Colinmcev 15:38, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * A longer introduction may be necessary, given the length of the article itself, that touches on more of the major points.
 * 7) **I wouldn't be averse to a longer introduction, although offhand I don't really think it's necessary and might be a bit overdone if it were too long. That being said, do you have any suggestions as to what specific major points should be touched on in the intro that aren't already? If I had that guidance, I'd be cool with making it longer, if need be... --Colinmcev 04:33, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) ***Infoboxes don't take up that much room...but then my resolution is pretty high. Meh.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) * Please spell out small numbers in the article ("twelve" instead of "12")&mdash;this is more a style issue.
 * 10) **This is one of my reporter things; AP style says spell the numbers out up until 10, then start using numerals. But I'm down with what you're saying, and I fixed it. --Colinmcev 04:33, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) ***If I may interject, Colin and I are both journalists, so I understand his using AP style for numerals. I do the same thing, and have encountered inquiry from users reviewing my articles. Please see my current Samoc Farr nomination up the list. This is indeed more of a style issue and as such, since there is no policy regarding the matter, should not be dictated to be done one way or another. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:41, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ****Thanks for addressing this. We're not a newspaper, ya'know... ;-) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) *****hehe I know. Sometimes my little habits are hard to break. I'll fix the rest of these objections after work today. --Colinmcev 13:59, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * Please replace the numbered list for stages of the disease with prose; this will cut down on the number of ref tags and generally make for a tidier article.
 * 15) **Well...this is just my preference (sorry I'm being so difficult! lol) but I like the numbered list for the stages. I know it cuts down the number of ref tags and that shorter paragraphs are a no no, but I felt like this was the way to describe the stages that made the most sense, and I thought it made the article as a whole sort of unique. I did change it to prose, but I'd encourage you and others to compare and contrast the two ways and see if you like the numbered list better. --Colinmcev 04:33, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) ***The sentiment is understandable, however doing it this way keeps consistency with other articles. Thanks.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 12:09, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) *TIMMMMMBERRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 03:21, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) Toprawa:
 * 19) *A few things I've noticed after glancing through the article:
 * 20) * No era tags?
 * 21) **Oops, fixed. --Colinmcev 15:38, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) * Your list of aliens infected must be sourced.
 * 23) **Done. --Colinmcev 15:38, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Source list should be ordered by OOU publication date.
 * 25) **Done. --Colinmcev 15:38, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) *Will go through this in its entirety soon. Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:41, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * In the last paragraph of the "Treatment" section, you end each sentence with "against the virus." Please reword to mix it up a little bit.
 * 28) **Is this acceptable? --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) ***Yup. Good. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:00, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 30) * Please add a little bit more in the "Release" section to explain that she allowed the NR to take Coruscant so that they would inherit the infected populace-her plot for their downfall.
 * 31) **I hadn't done this originally because I thought it was covered somewhat in Conception, but looking at it now I think you're right that a reference is warranted here as well. Added one. --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 32) * Please add a bit here to explain that resentment spread due to Humans being immune, which will help solidify your next sentence mentioning this: "Resentment quickly grew between the Human and non-Human populations"
 * 33) **How is it now? --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) ***Perfect. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:00, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) * Please reword a little bit to clarify what was quarantined here, Coruscant or the ships? "and many worlds ordered ships from Imperial Center quarantined so the disease would not be spread"
 * 36) **It's actually both. I changed it. --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) * Please link "medevac unit" to something. You may choose to just burn one of your red links with it :P "convinced that medevac units"
 * 38) **I guess I'll have to do just that. --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) * Please pipe link the specific battle you refer to in the image caption for the Bacta War.
 * 40) **Done.
 * 41) * In this respect, "dangerous" is a bit POVish. Could you choose a different adjective? "a precursor for the much more dangerous Diversity Alliance"
 * 42) **I just made a simple switch to violence. What do you think? --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) ***Works perfect. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:00, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 44) * This speculation here doesn't fit well, unless the source explicitly alludes to these possibilities. If not, should be removed: "The Krytos Plague stored in the Emperor's Plague Storehouse was either a different virus with the same name, or Derricote somehow smuggled some of the real Krytos virus into the storehouse in 6.5 ABY."
 * 45) **I'm open to any way we can reword it more effectively, but I'm opposed to removing it altogether. This one is tricky because, as we discussed last time around, this is basically an attempt to address a continuity error. In YJK: The Emperor's Plague, one of the characters discovered the Krytos virus being stored, even though the storehouse was sealed up prior to 4 ABY and the virus wasn't created until 6ish ABY. If we were to take it out altogether and not address this at all, I feel like the article would be incomplete. Personally, I feel the wording is acceptable, especially since it's worded the exact same way as in the Evir Derricote article, but again I'm happy to take suggestions.
 * 46) ***You could keep it just as is if you move it into the BTS. You could create a subsection titled "Inconsistencies" or something and explain the continuity error to an even greater degree. The BTS has some leniency for speculation like that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:00, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 47) ****I made that switch. What do you think? --Colinmcev 23:45, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 48) *****Excellent. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:57, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 49) **Colin, this is an absolutely outstanding, incredibly well-written article. In my opinion, this is the best production you've put forth thus far on the Wook. This was an absolute pleasure to read, and I'm really glad you're apart of our team. The BTS is well-researched, as well. Fantastic. :) Toprawa and Ralltiir 07:51, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 50) ***Thanks, man. This one was a lot more challenging than the character ones, but it was well worth it. (My next one, Gara Petothel, will probably be easier.) I appreciate all the help, as always, and am looking forward to seeing that little star in the corner when it's all said and done. :D --Colinmcev 23:14, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 51) IIRC, Sian Tevv wasn't actually infected by the virus, but had just been exposed to it. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:43, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 52) **Hmm, looks like you're right. Removed --Colinmcev 16:33, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 53) ***It might be worth mentioning in the history section that there was a risk of his contracting the virus, to illustrate that it wasn't just the poor people who got hit. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:35, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 54) ****Good idea. I added a reference into the Infections and unrest section. --Colinmcev 23:46, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 55) From Greyman:
 * 56) *To me, the section "Aliens infected by the Krytos virus" seems redundant almost. Is there any way to include those names in the actual body of the article somewhere? In prose? Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 19:31, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 57) **Sure. I was on the fence about that section anyway, especially considering that millions were actually infected, and that section only identified a small handful. I added the names to the prose and dropped it. --Colinmcev 22:21, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 58) Both in the text and in the infobox, you source Baragwin being susceptible to the disease to The Krytos Trap, however, the Baragwin do not appear in that novel. --Eyrezer 01:30, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 59) *My source for them was actually the Ultimate Alien Anthology, which I included cited in a reference to the Baragwin in the legacy section. I added additional citations to the Baragwin references in the text and infobox. --Colinmcev 05:02, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 61) * "One milliliter of an infected patient's blood could infect an adult. If physically injected or ingested, as little as one cubic centimeter was enough to infect a subject. The flesh contact rate was much lower, however, with ten cubic centimeters of viral fluid resulting in only a twenty percent infection rate." This could be clarified some.
 * 62) **Got it. --Colinmcev 03:13, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 63) * Make sure all the "Rebel" adjectives are removed, unless presented from the POV of an Imperial. They're the New Republic by this point. I think I got most of them.
 * 64) **I found one that you didn't get and fixed it. --Colinmcev 03:13, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 65) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:58, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I figured this was a natural to follow Evir Derricote. It proved to be a pretty big challenge though, especially since there was no real precedent (that I found) to follow for nominating a virus or bioweapon. I found that rather than have a straightforward chronological history of the virus, it was better to talk about the virus a bit first then get into the history, hence the "Biology" and "History" categories and the sub-categories. I hope you'll agree that this was the best way to approach it. And, unfortunately, I don't believe there are any real Krytos pictures out there, but I tried to include as many supporting pics as I could.--Colinmcev 06:44, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Good idea, an FA on a virus. That's a new one for the Wook... ;-) Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 03:21, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Disagree on the introduction. The lack of a picture on the side makes each paragraph and the whole thing seem shorter than it really is. - Lord Hydronium 03:23, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm fairly certain I, or another user, can cook up an infobox for this type of article. I'll see what I can do, and post it for your consideration, Colinmcev :) Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 04:41, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I was thinking the same thing as Greyman. I know we can put one together. ;) Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:48, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * There are certainly enough diseases to merit one and I have faith in our l33t coding skillz. Blastonecrosis, Emperor's Plague, etc. Suggestions for fields might include a name, created by, created when, species susceptible to, transmission type, maybe incubation period. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 06:24, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Here you go, Colinmcev :) Template:Infobox disease. As with other infoboxes, it has been created so that if a field is left blank, then it will automatically hide when it is saved. Have fun, Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 14:58, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Sweet, thanks! Nice to have an infobox for this. --Colinmcev 15:40, 29 March 2008 (UTC)

(3 Inqs/1 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) I'm raking hell with the references! *Maniacal laughter*  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:19, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  14:40, 30 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 19:32, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 00:05, 4 April 2008 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "Instead, Skywalker stated that the immediate goals of the Jedi were to find a new location for their refuge; Celchu’s presence and eventual report would compromise their secrecy, recover the kidnapped Allana, the heir of the Hapes Cluster, who was being held prisoner as political and personal leverage over Hapan Queen Mother Tenel Ka, and to destroy Centerpoint Station with the aid of Joran Seyah to prevent its use by either the Confederation or Galactic Alliance." Confusing. I get what you’re trying to say but the part about Celchu interrupts the whole sentence.
 * 3) **Set off the Celchu part with a pair of dashes instead. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * "As Celchu could now justifiably say he was coerced if questioned by his superiors, he agreed to Skywalker’s plan, his long ties with many members of the Jedi Order, as well as Antilles, Solo, the Horns influencing his decision." Explain who the Horns are. I think you're missing an "and" too.
 * 5) **Got it, I think. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * "Following their successful mock pursuit of Reveille, Antilles directed Rakehell Squadron to commence a similar routine, this time on Broadside. However, this time they were opposed by Galactic Alliance starfighters, and not just any unit." Remove one of the “this times”.
 * 7) **Cleared up. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * "Even glancing shots intended to damage the Rogues were insufficient to stop the famous squadron and Rakehell casualties were mounting. Even as he fought and flew, Antilles noted that while at least two Rogues, including Rogue Leader, a Duros named Lensi, had been killed, the Rakehells had suffered losses of their own." Remove an "even". Also, "as he fought and flew" should be changed to another wording.
 * 9) **Changed. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) * "With Celchu having returned to the Galactic Alliance, Rakehells had only eight pilots remaining in the engagement zone." Should it be “the Rakehells”?
 * 11) **Yes, it should, and now it is. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) * "Just before they left, the Rakehells observed the detonation of Centerpoint Station, which obliterated both the Corellian/Commenori fleets and the Galactic Alliance flotilla, aside from the ‘’Anakin Solo’’, and brought the battle to an abrupt halt. Italicize the Anakin Solo.
 * 13) **Oops. Carryover from a cut and paste. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * "Cheriss ke Hanadi was a female Adumari whom Wedge Antilles met during the New Republic’s inaugural diplomatic mission to Adumar." When was this mission?
 * 15) **Tidbit added. 13 ABY. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:07, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *Nice article.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 14:21, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) Image objections:
 * 18) * Image:WedgeAntilles.jpg: There's some sort of checkered distortion covering the entire picture.
 * Image:Corran tfp.jpg: Distorted.
 * Image:JainaTahiri.jpg: Distorted.
 * Image:Zekk(2).jpg: Needs a crop. Also, it contains massive .jpg artifacts.
 * --Imperialles 12:58, 2 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Ataru says:
 * WARNING! Fury spoilers, and more!
 * Yes, it is a single source nom. Don't let all those refs fool you.
 * I anticipate lots of objections, as this was written kind of fast and loose, but some of the things are intentional.
 * I know there's not much BTS info. I've e-mailed Source A for more, but no telling when I'll get a response.
 * First squadron article up for FA, so be wary of citing other precedents. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 01:19, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I didn't think it was possible to have that many refs for a single-source FA.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 01:54, 29 March 2008 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Encouraged to do this by Gonk and Eyrezer, after Gonk tricked encouraged me to write him up over IRC. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 23:55, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 07:35, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 18:45, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Interesting stuff, and an unusual/difficult topic. Good work. Thefourdotelipsis 07:40, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 22:27, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Good work. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:45, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * There are still a few redlinks at time of nomination: Evinn Dastt, Greg Gorden, Greg Costikyan, and Thannik. &mdash;Silly Dan talk) 23:55, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
 * It's below the limit of three now, I guess. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 03:20, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * And then there were none. I presume I'm allowed to strike my own objection...&mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:20, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * List in the bio, and the bio needs better sectioning, whether it's anecdotes or not. See Gunman for examples. Thefourdotelipsis 02:47, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * You mean it needs sectioning of any sort in the bio... As for the list, I honestly thought that was the best way to format the miscellany there.  I think it's better than presenting it as a prosified list, at least. I'll get back to you if I have a better idea, though. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 03:20, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, it's sectioned, but the list is still there. I don't see the advantage to turning it into a bulletless list (l"Tirog fought people on speeders, ran from Wookiees, commanded a platoon, spam, eggs, sausage and spam.") or a series of short disconnected sentences ("Tirog shot a speeder.  Tirog crashed a speeder.  Tirog ran from Wookiees.  Run, Tirog, run.") but if everyone else agrees with 4dot that a list is unacceptable, I'll make it a single sentence. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 03:50, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I actually think the bullet point lists is the better option here. --Eyrezer 04:06, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm going to bring this up at the Inq meeting briefly, and get a feel for what the general sentiment is here. I think it's mainly a consistency issue, as we've really uprooted lists where possible, and I can't think of another FA that has one. I think it could be presented as a bulletless list without a sacrifice in quality, since it's not exactly a manifesto or anything, but if it turns out I'm in the unvast minority, I'll concede. Thefourdotelipsis 23:15, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I've removed the bulleted list format, anyway (see below) but if you still want to bring it up at the meeting I'd be interested to know what the policy is. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:02, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Can do. Thefourdotelipsis 02:17, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 1) * FWIW, I dislike the list in the main article too.
 * 2) ** Have turned it into a prose list, and moved it to the top of the bio. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:28, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) * Humour me and spell out versus please.
 * 4) ** Since you were nice enough to spell "humour" with an extra "u"...&mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:28, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * A bit more detail on the Tirog's associates section--which I'm treating as something of a Relationships section given that it's non-MoS--in regards to Ace, the droid, and Drebble please. Even what you have listed in the intro is better than what's there, and you said they were some of his most important associates.
 * 6) ** I'll get to that. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:28, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) *** I expanded it a little: the problem is, there's not much to say in that section which I didn't either mention in the "Tirog vs." sections, or that I didn't say in the "Personality" section. For instance, while I call Drebble and Ace two of his most common companions, the truth is they interact with him exactly twice each in the rulebook: once during the marketplace fight (where they have already been traveling together for a while), and once each during a one-paragraph example of game rules (Drebble fixing Tirog's ship, and Ace reviving Tirog.) I did mention GT-9R was with him most frequently. (That's four times in the book: the audience with Dermeg, the visit to the Dancing Dewback, the fight on the space station, and the marketplace fight, plus the possibility that two more examples which have too little context to mention in the IU part (Tirog buys a droid, Tirog tries to fix a droid) involve GT-9R.) I may also edit the "Personality" section to avoid repetition (and address T&R's concerns.) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 22:13, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 02:11, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) ** As for the stylistic issues you mentioned on IRC (short paragraphs and use of "it appears that bla bla bla"), I suppose since you didn't put them into this comment I won't change them. 8) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:28, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) ***That's right; they're not something I'd go to the mattresses for. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:00, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) Toprawa:
 * 12) * Please reword this to avoid saying, essentially, that as a combatant he served in combat. A bit redundant: "A skilled combatant and hunter, he frequently found himself in the midst of combat"
 * 13) ** Rephrased as "skilled marksman, pilot, and hunter." &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:15, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) * Is it possible to add a little bit to this to say who was firing at him, specifically? "such as operating an AT-AT walker while avoiding fire from a speeder"
 * 15) ** Sorry, no. The incident in the book is only there as an example of the rules for a "walker-scale" vehicle dodging a "speeder-scale" vehicle.  No context is given.  (A lot of the incidents in his life come from these rule examples, with little or no context.) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * You refer to the speeder here as a "snowspeeder." Can you give this a little more context? AFAIK, T-47s were only referred to as "snowspeeders" when they were modified to operate in cold weather, such as on Hoth, obviously.: "and attacking a snowspeeder flying overhead"
 * 17) ** They call it a snowspeeder, say Tirog's shooting at it, and that's all. This one is just an example of how to determine the range for a target flying overhead when the shooter is on the ground.  Any attempt to explain why a known Rebel associate is firing at a vehicle apparently only used by the Alliance on Hoth would be pure speculation, I'm afraid.  &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) * In the first paragraph of the "Bio" section, during the enumeration of his adventures, you leave 4 successive ref notes to the same source. This is unnecessary. Just leave one reference note for that source at the end of that list, encompassing everything.
 * 19) ** That's a holdover from the "bulleted list" format which 4dot and Ataru had me remove. I'll fix it. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) * This wording doesn't fit well in its current speculative state. If you can't reword to avoid the "apparently," and the equivalent "unknown" wording of the first clause, I would suggest removing entirely: "While the ultimate outcomes of many of his adventures are not certain, it appeared that he came out on top most of the time"
 * 21) ** I'm not sure what to do about this. Most of these incidents, being quick examples of play to illustrate a particular rule, just have the middle of the story (e.g. there's no explanation of why he's shooting at a snowspeeder, and we never find out if he hit it either.)  All we have to imply a positive outcome (plus his general status as one of the "good guys") are his five Force points, as explained in the note. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 22) ***Could you reword, then, to avoid the first clause of that sentence, which says the outcome of this adventures is uncertain? Leaving it just as "Appearing to come out on top" with the accompanying reference note would suffice. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:49, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) **** But aside from surviving long enough to get Force points and do the "guide to the galaxy" thing in the revised rulebook, the outcomes really are unknown. All the same, I've rephrased it to just "It appeared he came out on top most of the time, and managed achievements that could be described as heroic." (And, as my comments below indicate, I think it should be "appears", as in "appears to those of us writing this article in the present from all available sources" not "appeared" as in "appeared during the course Tirog's career a long time ago.") &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:09, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Please reword to avoid "unknown" type phrasing: "Though the details of these alleged crimes are not known"
 * 25) ** Well, they aren't. Gov. Dermeg is described in the book as kind of crazy, so Tirog might not even have committed whatever crimes he's accused of. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 26) ***Could you say something along the lines of Dermeg's less than stable mental state left the validity of these accusations dubious as best? Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:49, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) **** I wouldn't want to place too much emphasis on the possibility of Tirog being innocent just because his accuser is a mite unstable, since he has several Rebel friends, and the rest of the section does goes on to have him shooting at Imperials. Rephrased it to "Whatever the details of these alleged crimes or the truth of Dermeg's allegations, Tirog was involved..." &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:09, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 28) *****Perfect. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:31, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 29) * Please reword one of the picture captions to avoid having them both say, simply, "Tirog."
 * 30) ** I'll do that. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 31) * Could you reword this to avoid the "apparently?" "who had apparently been pursuing the group for some time."
 * 32) ** The gambler in the example says "Well boys, we finally caught up to you!" So, come to think of it, the word "apparently" should be removed. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 33) * Can you try and paraphrase some of the direct quotes you use in the P&T? They're a bit overused.
 * 34) ** I'll try. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:09, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) *** I paraphrased or removed a few of them. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 22:26, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) *Very nice P&T and an excellent BTS. Just the the way those sections are to be done. Nice work. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:38, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) ** Thanks! (This is the only P&T I've even tried to do...glad it worked.  As for the BTS, it's really the most important part of the article, since it's necessary to explain why the IU part is so vague.)&mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * The BTS is especially nice. --Eyrezer 07:38, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks! &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 11:49, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * A comment on tense: a few copyedits have turned statements like "Most of what is known" and "it appears that" into "Most of what was known" and "it appeared that". I don't think this is correct. I realize we write in past-tense, but "what was known" implies that at one point, only facts A, B, and C were known, but now we know fact D as well.  "What is known" means to me that "this is what we know now, at the unspecified time after the fact where we write this article", so present tense is fine in this case. Unless someone can convince me this is incorrect, I'll probably change statements like that back. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 02:00, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

(4 Inqs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nominated.  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:39, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Went through this already; take note - this is how BTS sections are to be done. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:40, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) I like the quick fixes.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:55, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) It was good enough when I read it the first time. :P Thefourdotelipsis 23:34, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 21:34, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) Just as clean as before, with the addition of an incredible BtS.  Graestan ( Talk ) 01:51, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 2) * "After a brief discussion between the two Jedi, during which Hett refused to put an end to his campaign of aggression, Kenobi and Hett dueled for supremacy." I wouldn't exactly call it a duel for supremacy. That implies it was an alpha-male type thing.
 * 3) **Reworded. Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:48, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) * Change the caption of th first image (right under the infobox). "Surviving Order 66" sounds strange.
 * 5) **Eh, I think is sounds fine, but I changed it for you, Chack ;) Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:48, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * In the last picture (bottom left) depicting is spelled wrong.
 * 7) **Corrected. Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:48, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * "These claims revolved around the idea that had Kenobi killed Hett following their duel, he could have saved the galaxy untold amounts of grief." Reword to avoid using "untold amounts of grief".
 * 9) **Not sure what was wrong with it, but I've reworded that part for you. Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:48, 3 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) *  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:40, 3 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * An original creation of mine, from way back in the fall. I just did some expansion on it, so it's FAN time. Oh, and surprise, surprise: it's not TOTJ :P Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 23:39, 2 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 13:02, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 12:04, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:10, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) * You say both ships-in reference to Subjugator-took damage, but the opposing force is described as a task force. Context please.
 * 3) **Contextified.
 * 4) * What class of ship is Subjugator, that Blissex knows all about it?
 * 5) **Gah. I can't believe I did that. Fixed ,at any rate.
 * 6) * The whole escape from Subjugator is somewhat drawn out and even repetitive at parts. The detail is good, but don't restate the same things. Kaloff's taunting and their crossing the ship is mentioned twice.
 * 7) **I've weeded out and altered some of the context here.
 * 8) * Link to cyborging somewhere in the Cloud City incident, before it gets to Lira.
 * 9) **Erm...why? It's the first time we encounter it in practice in Blissex's story.
 * 10) ***Discussed in IRC. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 04:10, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) * Wait, wait. No context at all on why Cloud City still exists decades later when the article states that it would crash to the ground?
 * 12) **That too was silly. Fixed.
 * 13) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:04, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Let's just say there's a lot more about Mr. Blissex than I expected. Thefourdotelipsis 13:02, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Not a requirement or anything, but would you mind adding the Crisis on Cloud City info to Lando's article? Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:04, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Maybe at some stage in the future. Not right now. Thefourdotelipsis 23:04, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

(3 Inq/3 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:03, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 00:34, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) This article was FA quality when it was nominated for GA, but was about 17 words short. Glad you beefed it up a little bit, Acky. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:32, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:12, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Passes review.  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:20, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Greyman  http://images.wikia.com/central/images/9/9c/Jan.png ( Talk ) 17:35, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments

(1 Inq/3 User/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:03, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Whippersnapper. Thefourdotelipsis 00:55, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 16:35, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) As usual, another quality, well-written article from Acky. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:09, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * The intro states that their Force ghosts stayed on Endor for eternity, but the body makes no mention of this eternal state. My objection, therefore, lies in unsourced intro material. Please add a little bit to the body and source
 * 3) **Added a bit to the bio; thanks for pointing that out. :-)
 * 4) * I would still like to see a little bit more added to the P&T describing her connection with the Force and how it allowed her to haunt Sivrak's dreams for a year. Additionally, the story describes her as having purple blood at the Battle of Hoth, IIRC. That could be thrown in there someplace, too.
 * 5) **I've added a bit about the Force stuff to the P&T, and have added a mention of her purple blood. However, I'm not sure it's really necessary, and I'd be happy enough to remove it. Rest assured, when I get around the writing the Florn Lamproid article I will add it in there, also. :-)
 * 6) ***You're right. The purple blood isn't all that important, and has more to do with the species. Do you what you will with that. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:09, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) * I've added a source to the list, which kind of makes the last portion of your BTS lacking/incorrect. Please modify.
 * 8) **Modified.
 * 9) * Also, I can't remember if this was the character we were discussing for a possible BTM appearance, but I'll see if I can't find here in there for ya. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:35, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) **I believe the character may have been Myo, though I'd say Ibegon has an entry or at least a mention in Sivrak's. If you do find something, I'll be happy to add it in. :-) Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:06, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 12) *Change the name of "Reliving the past" please; it doesn't seem to be an apt description on Dice's article. It would be, however, on Sivrak's article. I suggest something like the generic "Legacy" section or perhaps "Postmortem appearances".
 * 13) **Changed to "Legacy." -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:36, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) *If you're going to discuss the Force time-shifting thing in P&T, then the Force ghost thing needs a mention as well.
 * 15) **Added a mention. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:36, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) *Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 18:26, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * The "Reliving the past" section was quite tricky, so I'm open to suggestion on it. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:03, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I wonder if there should be some IU mention of her brief encounter with Ketwol. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 16:35, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Added a mention. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:01, 6 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Green Tentacle (Talk) 01:22, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) A very easy read. Good work --Eyrezer 07:16, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Objections resolved over IRC. Nice job. Toprawa and Ralltiir 20:29, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * "Potentially" deadly? I think it would be best to just say "deadly.": "making the ship both fast and potentially deadly"
 * 3) * I think it would be best to indicate specifically what speeds the X-wing and TIE travels at, to give a greater idea of the ship's approximate speed in the absence of a solid number: "Together, these engines combined to produce a sublight speed greater than that of the T-65 X-wing starfighter and only slightly below that of the TIE/ln starfighter"
 * 4) **Not an objection, but in addition to this, I would recommend piping the TIE/In starfighter link to be TIE Interceptor, the more common name. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 01:14, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) * Saying the cargo space took up an excessive amount of space reads a bit redundantly. Please reword: "the crew quarters and cargo space took up an excessive amount of space aboard ship."
 * 6) * You begin the previous sentence the same way as this one. Please reword to mix it up a little bit: "Though the Stinger sank into the swamp"
 * 7) *Very nicely written. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:07, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm not sure how "canon" this news article is, but I think there is a unique piece of info in it about the "outlaw techs" doing the modifying, rather than Guri herself. --Eyrezer 07:16, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * IRC consensus said canon, so I've added it. Thanks for the pointer. Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:06, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

(3 Inq/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Gay pirates, ahoy! Thefourdotelipsis 07:38, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) In the proud tradition of our other serious FAs from somewhat ridiculous sources...&mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 19:30, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Shame there isn't more on him. Seems like an interesting character. Even in the galaxy celebrities can generate quite a following. :)  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 00:24, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Lord Hydronium 01:56, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:38, 8 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Pasta-bowl of Fiolli:
 * 2) * "Llez, a young fan of the fictional Reddjak from Space Pirates of the Galaxy, took it upon himself to save the pirate and join the Red Fury Brotherhood. Grilling the young Majooran for information&hellip;" Just a couple of minor things with this in the intro:
 * 3) **Knowing nothing about either character initially, I was wondering, "Who is the Majooran?" Then I realized it was Llez. Perhaps his culture or home planet could be worked into that first sentence for clarification.
 * 4) **Grilling is a powerful word, but it states later that Reddjak just questioned Llez. Was it an interrogation or casual "Why did you do this, kid?"–kind of questions.
 * 5) * The quote at the top of 1.3, "I've been waiting to do this for a long time, Zell…," implies that there is some backstory to this or extended period of time. Is anything available or was this just simply because he was tired of being bothered by Llez?
 * 6) * I think it might be wise to mention that Llez was accompanied by R2 and 3PO a little earlier in the text and mention why they were assigned to him, if known, or what there role had been thus far (even if it is simply as spectators).
 * 7) * Did the Ambassador know his son was aboard Reddjak's ship?
 * 8) *The final scenes are very thorough comparative to the first portions, but I assume this is the nature of the comic. If there is any way to bolster the earlier portions, I'd say go for it. Otherwise, it was an enjoyable read. Nice work 4dot.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:01, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) From the Bridge of Chack Jadson:
 * 10) * Why did Llez feel betrayed by Reddjak?
 * 11) **I've added a tidbit later on, which clarifies that Reddjak didn't tell Llez that he would be attacking Zell, making it understandably shocking to him later when his idol tries to kill his father. I hope that's clearer now.
 * 12) * "...but impatient, which would sometimes cost him the reward at the end of the day." Explain. How does the "end of day" part fit in with the rest?  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 23:35, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) **Well, I'm use "at the end of the day" here to basically mean "when all is said and done." Thefourdotelipsis 06:57, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 14) ***Ah, I see. I took it too literally.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:38, 8 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Thanks to Ozzel for image help and the idea of doing this article in the first place, long, long ago. Thefourdotelipsis 07:22, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Mind sorting out whether Reddjak's ship and Blood Brother are the same ship? I assumed that Abel's comments meant they were, but if not, Reddjak's ship needs to be linked in this article. Cull Tremayne 01:46, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Well, they were one article when I wrote the thing. ;) Thefourdotelipsis 05:41, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * It's apparently more complicated than a simple yes/no, as Abel's 4/4/08 6:03pm post in this thread demonstrates. jSarek 23:14, 7 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Yes, it's over 1,000 words. Yes, barely. Thefourdotelipsis 12:49, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Imperialles 22:43, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) She's pretty in that picture, even though she is wearing a whole set of bed sheets and a comforter.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 00:24, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Green Tentacle (Talk) 18:27, 8 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:05, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6)  Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Pasta-bowl of Fiolli:
 * 2) * In the intro: "&hellip;since she seemed to focus on the larger issues of her sector more than her native Thesme." Okay, it is a nit-pick-ery suggestion, but perhaps saying that she focused on the sector rather than exclusively on her home planet. It places the wording in a more positive light, I think.
 * 3) * (Bio:)"Despite her best efforts, her previous ties to Amidala and the more vocally anti-Palpatine Senators forced her to step down from office." Not sure I follow. Was she kicked out by the anti-Palpatine crowd or the pro-Palpatine crowd? Should it also read, "Despite her best efforts and her previous ties to Amidala&hellip;?"
 * 4) * (P&T:) "She soon learned the error of her ways, but was still unable to act while in office&hellip;" What did she learn? What did it cost her? I don't recall this being mentioned earlier. Perhaps this was the confusing section for me.
 * 5) * (P&T:) This section indicates that her helping the sector, rather than just her home planet, was quite a big deal on Thesme. In the intro it is stated as "only minor criticism." Please clarify this.
 * 6) *Good work so far, 4dot. Keep the beat going.  Master Aban Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:25, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) Two things
 * 8) * "Shessaun" is used in every single sentence in the intro. Could you please rejig a bit to use more pronouns?
 * 9) **Fixed.
 * 10) * This isn't a hard-and-fast objection, but the size of the intro is not in proportion to the size of the main body. The intro is over 200 of the slightly-over-1000 words, and looks a bit strange. Honestly, this is sort of gaming (for want of a better word) the 1,000 word rule, in my opinion. But, as I said, it's not a clear-cut objection; I'm interested as to your response, and we'll take it from there. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:13, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 11) **I see where you're coming from. However, you can't really accuse me of gaming the system, since the intro was the first thing I wrote. Still, that doesn't change how it looks now. To be honest, I don't think it's a major problem. It's not really fluffed up or embellished, it's simply the facts, and, obviously, not all of them. Thefourdotelipsis 00:04, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 12) ***Fair enough. It still looks odd to me, but as you said, it's no major problem. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 13:05, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 13) From the desk of Atarumaster88
 * 14) *Another pic, if we could get one, would be look good at the bottom. Maybe a funeral one? Not a hard and fast objection, just a suggestion. Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 20:12, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) **I thought of that, but then I think she's been deleted from that scene, and I only really put extra images in an article if there's no other images in the first place (see: Cal Omas). However, I don't really have any strong feelings on this, so feel free to add an extra picture if you think it will improve that section. :) Thefourdotelipsis 22:47, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * And the WTS beat goes on... Thefourdotelipsis 12:49, 6 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Anyone from LFL who doubts the success of WTS just needs to look at Fourdot's resume.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 20:55, 7 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Not exactly an objection: I would think that she is in Dressing a Galaxy, but I can't be sure. Perhaps someone with the book can check? There may even be another good picture. -- Ozzel 22:44, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Lord Hydronium 09:47, 7 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the Forest of Goodwood:
 * 2) * Can we get a lead quote for the "Life in the Republic" section, if possible?
 * 3) **There is none.
 * 4) ***Fair enough.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) *Please source how her Imperial-class designs were inferior to her father's work.
 * 6) **Already there.
 * 7) ***What I was hoping for was at least one example, perhaps a reference to there being "174,000 design flaws" on the ImpStar, as stated in one of the X-wing books, but if this isn't possible, please advise.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) * Please clarify this statement: "the daughter of Walex Blissex, the starship engineer of the Galactic Republic". Was he the chief starship engineer for the government, or simply a shipwright who lent his talents to the government?
 * 9) **He was "the starship engineer of the Galactic Republic who designed the Victory-class Star Destroyer". That's the full sentence.
 * 10) ***Reading this again, if I get what you're saying, it's fixed now.
 * 11) * "Blissex was the finest student that her father had ever trained, and she grew up to be a skilled engineer of her own" reads slightly awkward (second clause)
 * 12) **"Of her own" is removed.
 * 13) *"During the Clone Wars, engineers began designing vessels bigger, faster, and more heavily-armed." This is OR and reads awkwardly...perhaps an expansion and clarification, with references?
 * 14) **It's not OR, and it's sourced.
 * 15) ***Though the paragraph is sourced, the statement itself is not; it is OR due to no examples being described.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 16) * "Her ultimate dream project was the Imperator-class Star Destroyer, which in the wake of her prior success she was able to green-light, using her father's work as the basis of its design." An expansion on this wouldn't go amiss; why was it her dream? What about the design drove her to see it come to life?
 * 17) **There is no more info; see "comments".
 * 18) ***Fair enough.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) * You seem to use the phraseology "in his/her own right" a bit too often in the first part of the article.
 * 20) **It's used twice; the second is now removed.
 * 21) * Any information on how she met Wessex and chose to marry him?
 * 22) **No. See my statement under "Comments".
 * 23) ***Looking at sources about Denn would have helped, maybe?-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) * Why was Denn Wessex considered a starship genius?
 * 25) **Not known. See statement under "Comments".
 * 26) ***Ibid.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * In the first paragraph of the "The New Empire" section, you use 'political clout' twice, in the first and last sentences. A substitute is desired for one or the other.
 * 28) **Changed.
 * 29) *Please elaborate on what caused the rift between Lira and her father.
 * 30) **Already there. "Wessex saw the new Empire as an opportunity and gladly accepted the New Order, putting her at odds with her father and his beliefs."
 * 31) ***Further information should be found in sources regarding Blissex; this could, theoretically, improve a key section of her biography (IMHO).
 * 32) * "Entire planets had smaller gross domestic products than the cost of a single one of these new warships, and heated debate between the military strategists of the Imperial Navy, the Imperial Military Oversight Commission, and the soon-defunct Senate Budgetary Committee over the vessel even risked destroying the Empire." Ponderous and awkward.
 * 33) **Split into two sentences.
 * 34) ***"Heated debate between the military strategists of the Imperial Navy, the Imperial Military Oversight Commission, and the soon-defunct Senate Budgetary Committee over the vessel even risked destroying the Empire." This sentence is still unclear; did the debates threaten to destroy the Empire, or did they fear that building the Imperial-class ships would destroy the Empire?
 * 35) ****Shifted things around to make it clear "debate" is the subject of the sentence.
 * 36) *****Did a bit more tinkering. All's well now.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 11:58, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) * Please elaborate on the ultimate fate of the Imperial-class in relation to Wessex and what inspired her to create the Executor-class. Also, if possible, expand on her involvement in that project as well.
 * 38) **Everything on her involvement is there. See "Comments". The inspiration for the Executor-class is already there.
 * 39) ***Alrighty then.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) *"Wessex was unconvinced, and threatened Kolaff to capture them alive before the ship self-destructed." Threatened him with what?
 * 41) **He says he'll catch them, she says she hopes so, "for your sake". It's a non-committal threat.
 * 42) ***Rewording the sentence may be desired, then, perhaps to "and ordered Colaff to capture...".-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 43) * "Kolaff was defeated by the Rebels in an AT-ST duel" Something exciting like this surely deserves a bit more expansion.
 * 44) **If this were Kolaff's article, it would. Not relevant to Wessex, though.
 * 45) ***Meh.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 46) * "Wessex, whose reputation had taken a blow with her failure on the Subjugator, was interested; however, she kept this information to herself, intended to personally present the droid to the Empire once it had proven itself" needs fine-tuning.
 * 47) **Clarified.
 * 48) *Please elaborate on what an Evolution Droid does and its role in the crisis.
 * 49) **Already there.
 * 50) ***You mention them once in passing, but never again. Did they actually play a role in the unfolding chaos? Did they begin turning random persons into droids?-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 51) * Military ranks should not be capitalized unless referring to s specific person. "She made a transmission to Captain Orsk of the Star Destroyer Dauntless, informing the Captain of the attack".
 * 52) **Changed.
 * 53) * "While her mercenaries kept the Rebels distracted, Wessex fled the hangar out onto a narrow ledge encircling Cloud City, bounded on one side by the city's edge and the other by a drop of miles into the clouds of Bespin." Awkward.
 * 54) **Split into two sentences.
 * 55) ***Second sentence is still awkward.
 * 56) ****Changed.
 * 57) * "She was cold and aloof—even masculine" -- eh? Is there a source for that?
 * 58) **Yes. And it's already there.
 * 59) ***Was wondering about the use of the word "masculine", but if the source describes it thus...-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 22:36, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 60) * In the BtS: Surely the first and second paragraphs can be merged. Also, the third one should be expanded upon.
 * 61) **There's only one paragraph in the BTS. - Lord Hydronium 03:45, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 62) * My fault. I meant the P&T with that last objection. Can the first and second paragraph be merged, with the third expanded upon? -- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 04:22, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 63) **Merged and expanded. - Lord Hydronium 00:16, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 64) *TIMMMMMMBERRRRRRR!!!-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 04:22, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 65) BtS should include who created her, and probably a tad more sources/appearances info. For precedent, please see any of the last sixty odd FAs in the queue. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 19:53, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 66) *We don't know who created her. It's an assumption to say it was the person who wrote the original source (and since there are two authors, we don't even know which one it was, at that). As for source info, I don't believe any more can be added without devolving into trivia; it covers her first mention, her only actual appearances, and says the rest are basically repeating the information from the first mention. - Lord Hydronium 22:05, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 67) **Fair enough. I still think the authors could be mentioned and the BtS rejigged a bit to look like others FAs' (something like "Lira Wessex was first mentioned in the Star Wars Sourcebook, written by Bill Slavicsek and Curtis Smith..."), but it's not a big deal. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 22:11, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 68) ***That's a fair addition. Added. - Lord Hydronium 22:21, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Few things to get out of the way:
 * That gray smudginess on the one image of Lira isn't a bad scan, it's the way the art is.
 * We don't know who the intro quote is to.
 * If there's an aspect of her life that's not in there, it's probably not known. Also, if there's a source in the sources list that isn't referenced, there's no unique info there.
 * The BTS really says all there is to say about her that isn't trivial or already said in the sources section. - Lord Hydronium 09:47, 7 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 06:21, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) Very interesting character and article. - Lord Hydronium 09:44, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose Comments
 * I think you are going to want to use this. --Eyrezer 06:45, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * More likely, you will not. However, it could be worth a mention in the BTS. --Eyrezer 06:51, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Can we get an imagecat for Vanis, please.--Eyrezer 06:45, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Imagecat sez: Dun. Thefourdotelipsis 08:03, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) Small nitpick, but you may want to explain this: "The Dark Lord of the Sith brutally tortured Vanis, effectively making a vegetable of the man when he was through" for those who might not understand what "vegetable" might mean in this instance. -- Goodwood  [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 07:37, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2) *Meh. Good enough.-- Goodwood [[Image:Redstarbird.svg|20px]] ( Alliance Intelligence ) 08:15, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:58, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 23:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3)  Graestan ( Talk ) 23:55, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:42, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
 * 2) * Infobox image not exactly up to snuff on quality. Please substitute another or get a re-scan.
 * 3) **I've asked JMAS for a rescan. Only other real option is this, which looks a bit odd.
 * 4) ***I've done what I could to get an improved scan, and placed it in the article. The blasted image just seems to scan with some artifacts, and I don't think it's my scanner, I think it's the image. I did what I could for now with Photoshop to edit out the worst of the JPEG artifacts. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 23:15, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Still ten times better than what was there. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:55, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) * Set up who Grievous is a little in the intro.
 * 7) **Done.
 * 8) * "Alongside Mirialan Jedi Padawan Barriss Offee, Pablo-Jill fought against thousands of battle droids in the arena; however, they were both soon separated from the rest of the Jedi, and had been left behind by the LAAT/i gunships led by Grand Master Yoda." – Iron out tense awkwardness.
 * 9) **Altered.
 * 10) * Give some context for the Battle of Coruscant.
 * 11) **Done.
 * 12) * Not so keen on referring to Fisto as "Jedi Councilor," as IU I haven't really seen the term.
 * 13) **Changed.
 * 14) * Explain Grievous's firing on innocents. Is there more info?
 * 15) **Not really. I've clarified a little, but there's nothing else to add.
 * 16) * Were the other senior Jedi really worried for their own safety?
 * 17) **Altered slightly.
 * 18) * Graestan ( Talk ) 23:30, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 19) **Thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:03, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 20) ***No problem. Lovely article. Graestan ( Talk ) 23:50, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 21) Toprawa:
 * 22) * Pablo is my next review. For now, I've noticed reference number 10 is incorrectly formatted. Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:13, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 23) **Done. It was a simple fix. It was marked LOE instead of LoE. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 01:34, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 24) ***Thanks, JMAS. :)
 * 25) * Please link the CIS droid army page here: "battled the vast droid armies of the Confederacy of Independent Systems"
 * 26) **Nevermind that one. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:21, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 27) * Can we name these Jedi? I believe Shaak Ti was foremost among them: "and more skilled than the ones he had encountered when taking Palpatine"
 * 28) **While Shaak Ti was around, I think Grievous's thoughts were referring to the ones he killed (which I have listed), since Shaak Ti's supposed to be one of the best swordsbeings.
 * 29) * Two things here. Please elaborate a little bit more that it was a collection of lightsabers taken from the Jedi he had slain. Also, I would like to see mention of Grievous taking his saber in his biography section as well: "The cyborg added Pablo's lightsaber to his collection."
 * 30) **Added a mention plus description in the biography.
 * 31) * Can we get a 1stID tag on one of the appearances?
 * 32) **I doubt any of the current sources/appearances were the first to name him, though I'm not really sure what would have and how I might find it.
 * 33) ***Wouldn't AOTC be the 1st appearance? He wasn't named in it, but he clearly was, as one of the images from the article is a screenshot from the film. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 12:41, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 34) **** is for first identified; AOTC is already listed as the . -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:27, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 35) *****I think I see what you're saying. It seems as thought he was named during production of Ep. II. Toprawa and Ralltiir 17:42, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 36) ******This one had me curious. And I'm thinking the Databank update (Inside the Jedi Temple) made on June 21, 2002 was his first official ID as Pablo-Jill. -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 17:59, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 37) *******Looks like it. Added to article. Thanks for that, JMAS, and for the image and the other objections you resolved. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:37, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 38) ********Happy to help. :) -  JMAS  Hey, it's me! 18:40, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 39) *Excellent job of description and contextualizing. Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:17, 11 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 40) **Thank you. And thanks for the review. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 12:12, 11 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments
 * Written some months ago for GA. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:58, 9 April 2008 (UTC)

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Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:58, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:58, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Well-written.  Chack Jadson  (Talk) 22:19, 10 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) *Please elaborate on this a little to bit to explain why he was sent there: "Monn was one of a team of Jedi sent to Geonosis"
 * 3) *Is "cubling" the canonical term used? Not "cub?": " who found that the young cubling had"
 * 4) *This is all very redundant. Please reword where appropriate: "had great potential in the ways of the Force. Monn was taken to be trained in the ways of the Jedi and the Light side of the Force"
 * 5) *In this picture caption, can you reword or add to this to specify what battle he is fighting in: "Monn during the Clone Wars."
 * 6) *I really don't care whether or not you put periods at the end of your picture captions or not, though they should be done in accordance with wiki's style, as we discussed earlier. But, whatever you do choose, please pick one way and stick with it.
 * 7) *Saying here that they were dispatched to fight the CIS in a Clone Wars battle seems kind of redundant. Unless you can say that they fought, maybe, a specific/notable element of the CIS, I would recommend removing that part: "Later in the war, during the Outer Rim Sieges, Monn and his fellow Jedi Agen Kolar and Aayla Secura were dispatched to an ice-covered planet to fight the CIS"
 * 8) *You say in his P&T that he raised himself, but in the bio you merely say he was orphaned. Being orphaned doesn't necessarily equate to having to raise yourself, I feel. Please specify in his bio that he did this.
 * 9) *I think it would be pertinent to add a little bit to the BTS to explain that his name is obviously derived from the very creature from which he was created - "Wolf Man." Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:25, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

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Support
 * 1) Thefourdotelipsis 13:30, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose

Comments

I presume there's no picture because no picture exists. Is there a picture of some object associated with him which could be used as a placeholder in the template anyway? &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:13, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * No, nothing at all, to my knowledge. We've got a couple of FAs without images in the template, so it's no biggie. Thefourdotelipsis 14:16, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I guess I'm thinking more about the image we'd put on the front page when it gets featured. &mdash;Silly Dan (talk) 14:17, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * We wouldn't have one. It does look a bit boring, but it's happened before, and it's only for a day. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 14:21, 12 April 2008 (UTC)