Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/WED-15-77

WED-15-77

 * Nominated by: Darth Morrt 03:50, November 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: This is an other movie character and my first droid nomination.

Support

 * 1) I love droids! MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 17:27, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 03:47, January 7, 2011 (UTC)
 * 3) ~ SavageBob 03:05, January 9, 2011 (UTC)

Prepare to be savaged...

 * Nice work! But are you sure you've checked all the available adaptations and behind-the-scenes guides to its two movie appearances to be sure to get all relevant info? I don't think we can expect you to check everything, but you should at least make sure you've consulted all mainstream adaptations and behind-the-scenes guides, as listed here. ~ SavageBob 05:11, November 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Checked. Darth Morrt 02:58, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, I'll review the rest in the next couple of days. ~ SavageBob 03:10, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * How about some quotes from the radio drama? I'm pretty sure Luke talks to the thing. ~ SavageBob 06:46, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * I've added three. The third is fine for P&P, but I am not sure that each of the first and the second are needed. Your opinion? Darth Morrt 10:17, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * Good! I'm not one of those who thinks quotes have to be "needed"&mdash;quotes are generally for color in my opinion. These are nice. ~ SavageBob 15:52, November 23, 2010 (UTC)
 * There's some background/BTS information on this droid (and its counterpart) in The Making of Star Wars: The Definitive Story Behind the Original Film. Do you have access to the book? It should also be added to the Sources section. ~ SavageBob 19:01, January 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't have the book. May I ask you to add the new information to the articles or to give me an excerpt? Darth Morrt 22:11, January 6, 2011 (UTC)
 * I've written the stuff out on the article's talk page. Hopefully some of it will be useful. ~ SavageBob 18:28, January 8, 2011 (UTC)
 * I went ahead and added more of the information, retooling your BTS a bit. Hope you find it to be acceptable! I think we should get an article on the unidentified treadwell. Otherwise, the article looks very good. ~ SavageBob 00:16, January 9, 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you. The Bts is good. The other droid has an article: Unidentified WED-15 Treadwell (Lars homestead), but it already has been linked in the Bio as "another Treadwell". Do you mind if I merge the two "making" refs into one, giving two different page numbers, like I've done with two other books? Darth Morrt 02:06, January 9, 2011 (UTC)
 * If you're going to list page numbers at all, why not separate them out for all sources? The idea with page numbers is to allow other users to go back and find the references easily in what are often very thick books. But there's no rule against merging them together, so feel free. ~ SavageBob 03:05, January 9, 2011 (UTC)

Fred strikes

 * Check the tense in Personality and programming. It should not be "cannot", but "could not." MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 05:15, November 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Darth Morrt 10:23, November 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * It should be "its", not "it", after the above mentioned error. MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 12:09, November 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Darth Morrt 23:40, November 19, 2010 (UTC)
 * I'll review more thoroughly later. If a week goes by, feel free to send me a message. God bless! MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 00:30, November 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * OK, a few grammatical errors. Shouldn't every instance of "Lars's" be "Lars'" instead. "Because" is misspelled in the intro. A comma is needed after "the Jedi Anakin Skywalker". And right after that it should be "arrived on" instead of "arrived to". In the next sentence it should be "another", not "an other". Is it supposed to say "north ride" or "north side"? I don't believe the comma before "because it was taken" is necessary. Skipping back to the intro, it should be "Tosche power station" instead of "Toschi". In the Faf section, it should be "held" instead of "holded". It should be "one of which", not "one of them". In the Bts now.  No comma before "in a scene". Ok, I'll finish on my other iPod so I can copy and paste.  MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 01:58, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed.
 * Here we go. "The scene was cut from the released version of the film, but appeared in various adaptations, including the novel, the radio drama and the manga comic. In the radio drama, WED-15-77 didn't melt down, just stopped moving, and Owen mentioned later, that he didn't need an other Treadwell, because he had one. This suggests, that the Unidentified WED-15 Treadwell on the Lars homestead was intended to be WED-15-77, not an other droid of the same line. However, the Databank confirmed the meltdown to be final. According to the Databank, the same droid model was used in the Jawa sandcrawler—later identified as WED-15-I662—and an other Treadwell appeared in the background on the Lars homestead." This whole section needs a lot of work. Try this: "The scene was cut from the released version of the film, but it appeared in various adaptations including the novel, the radio drama, and the manga comic. In the radio drama, WED-15-77 didn't melt down, but rather he just stopped moving. Owen mentioned later that he didn't need another Treadwell because he had one. This suggests that the unidentified WED-15 Treadwell on the Lars homestead was intended to be WED-15-77 instead of another droid of the same line. However, the Databank confirmed the meltdown to be final. According to the Databank, the same droid model was used in the Jawa sandcrawler—later identified as WED-15-I662—and another Treadwell appeared in the background on the Lars homestead." I think that's it.  MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 02:13, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Darth Morrt 09:19, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed the last "an other" that I saw. That's it! MasterFred Commerce Guild.svg(Whatever) 17:26, November 29, 2010 (UTC)

I don't know the same things you don't know, you know
Intro:
 * I'm pretty sure there is a page for Repair droids...why no link?
 * Heh. Sorry. Maintenance droid. Maintenance droid. :P-- Bonslywizard Trade_Federation.svg( Send a transmission ) 02:36, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Linked, but I have piped it, because neither source calls it maintenance droid.
 * "At one such occasion..." Shouldn't it be "On"?
 * Fixed.
 * Bacuse?
 * Fixed.
 * So, Luke was eager to meet his friend, eh? What friend? Also, the bio says friends. Which one?
 * Fixed. Darth Morrt 09:32, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * The rest is coming, don't worry...-- Bonslywizard Trade_Federation.svg( Send a transmission ) 02:29, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Bonsly, objections such as "one missing link" and a simple grammatical fix fall under the Sofixit clause, which you should be familiar with by now. 1358  (Talk)  07:58, November 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * Heh. I should really write it down somewhere before I forget again...-- Bonslywizard Trade_Federation.svg( Send a transmission ) 13:23, November 28, 2010 (UTC)

The Wizard did it
Sorry it took so long, but, here I am now, so...

Intro:
 * Not an objection really, but could you maybe add where the power station was?
 * Fixed Darth Morrt 18:58, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Is his friend Fixer or Laze? I realize they are the same person, but only after I checked the link. Stay consistent with what you call him.
 * I've fixed Fixer :) Darth Morrt 18:58, December 21, 2010 (UTC)

Bio:
 * "One day, Lars asked Skywalker to repair the vaporators on the south ridge with the help of Treadwell who got an electric shock during the work in consequence of using an uninsulated manipulator." Run-on. Separate into two sentences.
 * Fixed. Darth Morrt 18:58, December 21, 2010 (UTC)

PP:
 * "It was a recalcitrant yet hardworking droid that prefered working for Owen's wife, Beru, since she gave the droid simple, predictable jobs." Predictable isn't really the right word here. Try something else.
 * The Visual Guide and the Databank use the word 'predictable'. Changed a little. Does it work?

BTS:
 * You say WED's scene was cut twice. Get rid of one mention.
 * Fixed. Darth Morrt 18:58, December 21, 2010 (UTC)

This should be it, but I'll read it over again once these are over with. Bonslywizard ( Send a transmission ) 15:16, December 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Heh. Sorry for the long wait...again, but everything looks fine now. Great job. :) Bonslywizard Trade Federation Symbol.jpg( Send a transmission ) 03:46, January 7, 2011 (UTC)

Graestan

 * Violation of sourcing policy; I would really avoid using terms like Imperial Period and Republic Classic Era in general, unless you plan to source them to which publications describe them. For instance, in the first paragraph of the bio, you indicate the Republic Classic Era as being referred to in Episode II, which does not mention it whatsoever. There may be additional instances of this in the article; I'd appreciate if you'd root them out before I have to, beginning with these time periods which must be removed or sourced accordingly. Graestan ( Talk ) 03:03, January 21, 2011 (UTC)
 * Last sentence of Features and functions has a grammatical error. Graestan ( Talk ) 03:03, January 21, 2011 (UTC)