Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Lohjoy


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Lohjoy

 * Nominated by:  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 00:33, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: (L)oh joy!

(4 ECs/1 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) Reverend Lohjoy. Menkooroo 15:36, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Talk ) 01:50, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 23:24, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:49, September 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 07:25, September 21, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I think you can add a fair amount of context to this, Ie, you currently don't even mention the war Lohjoy was involved in. Does it give a skin color for Lohjoy? Not all Ho'Din are green. --Eyrezer 22:20, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added context. Nope, it doesn't give a skin color.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 22:57, September 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Is it Omen or "The Omen"? The article flip-flops. Menkooroo 15:14, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) *It's just Omen. Corrected.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 15:17, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Cav:
 * 6) * While Lohjoy was transmitting a hologram to Omen's commander, Yaru Korsin, her snake-like Ho'Din hair caught on fire; she was subsequently killed by a hull breach. Currently this reads like her hair caught on fire because she was sending a hologram, which I'm sure probably isn't the case. Can you tweak it slightly, maybe adding how her hair actually caught on fir (if known) to remove the implication? - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 10:10, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 7) **Reworded.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 12:06, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 8) Soresu
 * 9) * Could you give the quote some sort of context? Otherwise, it's confusing why it just cuts off abruptly. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 23:03, September 15, 2010 (UTC)
 * 10) **Done.  Darth Karika  will destroy your planet! 00:56, September 16, 2010 (UTC)

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