Wookieepedia:Good article nominations

 This page is for the nomination of good articles. This is not a way to showcase the articles of your favorite characters, spaceships, or the like. For a list of Good articles, see Category:Wookieepedia good articles.

A Good article is an article that adheres to quality standards, but cannot reach FA status due to its limited content.


 * Good article nominations history
 * Good article checklist
 * Good article nomination rules

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An article must&hellip;


 * 1) &hellip;be well-written and detailed.
 * 2) &hellip;be unbiased, non-point of view.
 * 3) &hellip;be sourced with all available sources and appearances.
 * 4) &hellip;follow the Manual of Style, Layout Guide, and all other policies on Wookieepedia.
 * 5) &hellip;following the review process, be stable, i.e., does not change significantly from day to day and is not the subject of ongoing edit wars. This does not apply to vandalism and protection or semi-protection as a result of vandalism.
 * 6) &hellip;not be tagged with any sort of improvement tags (i.e. more sources, expand, etc).
 * 7) &hellip;have a proper lead that gives a good summary of the topic if the length of the article supports it. This is essential in articles over 1000 words but may not be appropriate on articles with limited content.
 * 8) &hellip;have no more than 3 redlinks for articles less than 500 words, no more than 5 redlinks for articles 500 words or more, and no redlinks in the introduction, infobox, or any templates.
 * 9) &hellip;have significant information, especially a biography for character articles. For articles under 1000 words in length, comprehensive detail is required with all information covered from all sources and appearances. For articles over 1000 words, broad coverage addressing all major aspects of the topic is sufficient.
 * 10) &hellip;be completely referenced for all available material and sources. See Sourcing for more information.
 * 11) &hellip;have all quotes and images sourced.
 * 12) &hellip;provide at least one quote on the article if available. A leading quote at the beginning of the article would be preferred, though not required if no quotes are available. Although quotes may be placed in the body of the article, a maximum of one quote is allowed at the beginning of each section.
 * 13) &hellip;ideally include a "personality and traits" section on all character articles if information is available.
 * 14) &hellip;ideally include a "powers and abilities" section on relevant character articles, especially for Force-sensitive characters where said powers and/or abilities are stipulated.
 * 15) &hellip;include a "Behind the scenes" section.
 * 16) &hellip;include a reasonable number of images of sufficient quality to illustrate the article, if said images are available.
 * 17) &hellip;counting the introduction and "Behind the scenes" material, be at least 250 words long (not including captions, quotes, or headers, etc). Alternatively, a comprehensive article cannot exceed 3000 words.

How to nominate:


 * 1) First, nominate an article you find is worthy of good status, putting it at the bottom of the list below. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above.
 * 2) Add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.
 * 3) Be sure to place sign in the "Nominated by" line when the nomination is posted for voting.
 * 4) Others will object to the nomination if they disagree that the article is good enough; they will then supply reasons for doing so, and ways to improve the article (errors, style, organization, images, notability, sources).
 * 5) Supporters adjust the article until the objectors (with reasonable objections) are satisfied.

How to vote:


 * 1) Before doing anything, be sure to read the article completely, keeping a sharp eye out for mistakes.
 * 2) Afterward, compare the article to the criteria listed above, and then either support or object the article's nomination.
 * 3) *If you object, please supply concrete reasons for doing so, and how it can be improved.
 * 4) As stated above, any objections will be looked upon by the nominator, supporters, and anyone willing to improve the article, and action will be taken to please the objectors. Do not strike other users' objections; it is up to the objector to review the changes and strike if they are satisfied.
 * 5) Once a nomination has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. Alternatively, if a nomination receives a total of five AgriCorps votes with no outstanding objections before one week has passed, the nomination will be considered successful.
 * 6) The article is placed on the Good article list.

All nominations will be considered idle and are subject to removal by AgriCorps vote if objections are not addressed after a period of 3 weeks.

Good article nominations
To nominate an article for Good article status, list it here. Nominated articles must meet all seventeen requirements stated above. If an article has a total of five votes, with at least three votes coming from AgriCorps or Inquisitorius members&mdash;one of which must be an AgriCorps vote&mdash;after at least a week since it was nominated (beginning the day of its nomination) and no objections (or the objections have been stricken or overridden), the article will be considered a "Good article" and tagged with the template. The talk page will also be tagged with the GA template. For complete instructions on archiving nominations please see here. Also remember to add GAnom at the top of the article you are nominating.

Timar Daragon

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:48, 25 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: WP:TOTJ.

(2 ACs/1 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) This really has been on the page unfairly for far too long. Grae's objection seems to be fixed. There is still alot of resemblance, but there is no longer a cut-and-paste feel to the article. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 06:54, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 09:28, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 03:19, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 04:45, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Paraphrase more. This cannot read exactly like Hok Daragon. Graestan ( Talk ) 16:20, 26 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I don't exactly see how this is a problem; all the info on her is included, and the only thing that really distinguishes them is that one is male and one is female. They're together for the entirety of the comic.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 15:17, September 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Fine, fine, I'll paraphrase.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 22:57, September 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) ***Wording has been varied. I hope this will satisfy your objection.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 21:13, September 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) This is still too similar to Hok. Yes, a few things here and there have been changed, but there are still several places that could easily be paraphrased, where you could easily substitute a few synonyms to make it so that there aren't so many sentences that read exactly or almost exactly the same.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:51, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:05, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Attack of the Clone
 * 8) * Please vary your word choice. This might be picky, but two sentences starting off with "during" doesn't always promote good writing. And please continue to watch your linking.  CC7567  (talk) 20:38, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 04:11, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Comments Remove nomination (AgriCorps vote only)
 * 1) Cut-and-paste of Hok Daragon. Nominator expresses no desire to paraphrase.  Graestan ( Talk ) 18:47, September 9, 2009 (UTC)

Dor Gal-ram

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:50, September 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A double nom with Horak-mul.

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Jedi Kasra (talk) 17:45, October 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) --Eyrezer 20:42, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 23:58, November 1, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 03:23, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Same issue as my objection for Gorrm. He didn't appear in Conquest and Unification so he can't be listed as appearing in the whole story arc.  Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:55, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Addressed.
 * 3) The Grand Master
 * 4) * There seems to be a bit of superfluous information in the bio, that really just doesn't add anything to the article for Gal-Ram. (i.e. the extra info about the arrival of the Daragons and subsequent events could be condensed quite a bit to just the necessities)
 * 5) **I disagree; I believe this level of context is required to understand what is going on.
 * 6) ***Not really: it could easily be condensed to something along the lines of "Around this time, the arrival of two Humans, Gav and Jori Daragon, opened up a conflict between Kreesh and Sadow. Eventually, Sadow staged a Republic attack..." As it is now it consists mainly of fluffy detail with no pertinence to Gal-ram. We don't need to know that the Daragons arrived in the Starbreaker 12 during the Funeral of Marka Ragnos, that they arrived in the Valley of the Dark Lords, and that they were arrested and imprisoned. We don't need to know what both Sadow and Kreesh wanted to do with them and why. We just need to know that their arrival caused a rift which eventually led to Sadow's staged attack and self-declaration as Dark Lord, which caused Kreesh to rally his supporters, including Gal-ram.
 * 7) ****Addressed.
 * 8) * Also, the bio could be broken up into more than just the current two long paragraphs.
 * 9) **Addressed.
 * 10) *Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 18:14, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) Attack of the Clone
 * 12) * "In 5,000 BBY, Sadow staged an attack on the Sith Empire by the Galactic Republic": the misuse of idioms here presents a rather noticeable lack of clarity.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) *"After the meeting, Naga Sadow staged a Republic attack on the Daragons' ship, the Starbreaker 12 's hangar on Ziost and stole the ship." This makes it sound like the hangar is the ship, and I still find it unclear how a Sith Lord can stage an attack on behalf of the Republic.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) ***First part still remains.  CC7567  (talk) 04:47, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) * As you've done before, you make the reference to the Battle of Khar Delba so late that it's almost pointless to include it when it has no relevancy to Gal-ram in its current placement.  CC7567  (talk) 20:47, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Addressed.

Comments

Metellos Exchange

 * Nominated by: Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 12:17, October 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I didn't want to fluff it over 1000 words for FAN; it stands at just over 900. I also wasn't writing this with the intention of GAing it but, I wrote it like that anyway. Why not?

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)
Support
 * 1) Wanna see more of these&hellip;--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:28, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) I'm probably doing economics next year. Maybe then I'll have some idea what you wrote :P SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:00, November 4, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) I'll review the article in full shortly. Taking a glance at it though, I do suggest you add a couple other images to it, such as one of Gryph as the professor, or something.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:08, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *Added File:Metellos 3.jpg and, to kill two birds with one stone, File:Slyssk confronts plaarvin.jpg. Thanks for the suggestion. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 19:25, October 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Here we go
 * 4) * ?In the intro, the second & third sentences begin with "It". Can you change one of them?
 * 5) **Changed the latter one.
 * 6) * The Mandalorian Wars need to be mentioned somewhere; I'd like to see it mentioned in both intro and body. For example, the Metellos Exchange was auctioning trade franchises with the planet Mandalore for after the war ended.
 * 7) **Mentioned in intro and body.
 * 8) * I would also like to see the fact that Nunk Plaarvin was a Ephant Mon. Perhaps in the intro, but definitely in the body.
 * 9) **I added the Ephant Mon link in the 3rd paragraph of "History", please try to move it in a earlier spot.
 * 10) ***Ephant Mon is an individual. He and Nunk are Chevin and that is mentioned in the first sentence of the "Concept" section. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:57, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) ****(Smacks head). I apologize.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:26, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) * I believe it wouldn't hurt to state that Jarael was a female Arkanian offshoot.
 * 13) **Done.
 * 14) * Context needed for Slyssk.
 * 15) **YEEP! I had already given him a bit of context (former member of Raff Syndicate) so I added that he was a Trandoshan. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:57, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) ***Thanks, that's what I wanted to see.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:26, October 30, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *That's all I have for now. Gutsy move, nominating a corporation. Never could fully understand economics.--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 13:53, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) **Thanks for the review Kasra, luckily I study economics :P. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 20:57, October 29, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) One thing:
 * 20) *"The disruption caused meant that Plaarvin would have to announce that Jarael's claim was correct and that Italbos was rich with minerals in order to make a profit to pay to the Raff Syndicate." But she claimed the opposite, right? Why would the disruption mean that he has to say that she is correct? Please explain this. If I'm missing something, please state it here.
 * 21) **No, Jarael's claim was that "...the place is richer than stink! I've seen it! All your mineral projections were low&mdash;way low!" I did miss out a little bit of info that said what the disruption actually was. Hopefully I've clarified it. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 10:52, November 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) *Interesting concept.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)
 * 23) Attack of the Clone
 * 24) * Please try to clarify when this was set up before going off and detailing Hierogryph's exploits. It's not clear otherwise.
 * 25) **Everything to do with the set up is in the "Concept" section so it would just be repeating part of it again to include it in the history. I think I've added what you were looking for but I'm not quite sure.
 * 26) *"before the owners of the claims to it": please try to reword this; it's a little awkward wording.
 * 27) **I cannot find any other way to word it. "Claimants" wouldn't work IMO, or is that too picky?
 * 28) ***I'd like you to first clarify what you're trying to say so that I can help you find the best wording. I still find it hard to discern the meaning of the sentence.  CC7567  (talk) 23:00, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 29) ****It should refer to the people who bought the claims to the various trade rights for Italbos. Because they are not purchasing the claims (to the rights), not claiming them, "claimants" cannot be used. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 23:57, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) *****Hmm. Actually, I think it's clearer now with the clarification that you just provided; the only part that concerns me is the "claims to it," as this is not a proper idiom. Is it possible to state that those people bought the claims to Italbos's various trade rights through the Exchange before bringing Hierogryph and his friends into the mix? It seems like the best possible solution to this problem, as it will ease the amount of context that you have to give when you mention Hierogryph a little while later.  CC7567  (talk) 00:06, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 31) * "Luckily for Hierogryph and Carrick": please check WP:NPOV to see if this is appropriate to the article.
 * 32) **I wasn't sure if I could reword it without sounding clunky but the proper NPOV should be there now.
 * 33) *Watch your comma usage, please.  CC7567  (talk) 21:01, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 34) **I'll try. Thanks for fixing some issues here and there as well as the review. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 22:49, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 35) * Please rephrase the opening sentence of the History. The first clause is giving me the impression that you're trying to rush into detailing Hierogryph's conning instead of focusing on the Exchange as a whole, and it's also improperly worded. To clarify my previous objection: no, the Concept section did not clarify when it was set up.
 * 36) **Addressed, no specific date is given in the sources.
 * 37) * "Before Hierogryph and Carrick could hasten to the Negotiating Room to free their companions, Jarael and Dyre had already managed to free themselves with little harm done": please check both your verb tense and chronology here. Both are unclear because of the first issue.  CC7567  (talk) 23:00, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 38) **Addressed. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 23:57, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 39) *I recommend checking to see if everything currently in the Concept section is exclusively related to the section or should also be in the History as well. The distinction between both should be a little more defined.  CC7567  (talk) 00:06, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Spoilers for KotOR 47: What with the release of Issue 47, would it be wise to change mentions of (spoiler: Rohlan Dyre to Demagol, in disguise as the former ), or similar wording? If so, I hope we don't have to do this for every article with (spoiler: Dyre ) in... Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]](talk) 22:49, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

Tuknatan

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:02, November 2, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Graaaaawk!

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Graawk! Graawk! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:54, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 19:01, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 21:19, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy Farlstendoiro versus the aliens
 * 2) * Per precedent, "unidentified" should not be used in IU articles.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) * Biography, first paragraph: Two almost consecutive uses of the word "However". Try to reword one.
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) * Can you explain why a large portion of the Sith force disappeared? I mean: Sadow was concentrating to create the illusions, and Gav Daragon broke his concentration.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) *I've done sofixit here and there in the article, hope you don't mind. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:35, November 2, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

19,000 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:00, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Insert pithy comment here.

(1 ACs/3 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:20, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 08:34, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Great work!  JangFett  (Talk) 23:33, November 11, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:29, November 13, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) *"Outside the galactic disc, on Kamino, the isolated world underwent a dramatic climate change." Reword this. gives the impression that the isolated world and Kamino are separate entities. That's all, good work.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:02, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) **Tweaked. Thanks, Floyd. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Farlstendoiro and the Old Times
 * 4) * Intro: "East" is in inverted commas; I understand why. Could you reword the sentence to avoid unsual usage ?
 * 5) **Ok, I do not see the violation considering the colloquial nature of it from an in-universe perspective, but I'll relent. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * The galaxy in: This paragraph has two distinct parts: about Kamino and about elsewhere. Could you divide the section in two paragraphs? Also, Impact.
 * 7) **I do understand why you ask this and thought long about this. Why it was left alone: This was done to prevent short paragraphs that would not meet proper English writing conventions. The Impact section would have a violating paragraph due to number of sentences. To keep the parallel construction&mdash;as well as the fact that the second paragraph of The galaxy... would also be in violation due to sentence structure&mdash;it is best to leave them together as one. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * Footnotes: Could you replace "Simple math" with some other expression?
 * 9) **This was used as provided in WP:NOR and has been used for all the other dates that have been made into GAs to qualify that simple (or basic) math was used to derive the information rather than original research. I am just complying with the guidelines. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:24, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) *Good work. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:25, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) **Thank you, Skippy.
 * Bts, maybe?  CC7567  (talk) 21:22, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

18,780 BBY

 * Nominated by: &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 02:00, November 3, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: We are never informed how the tower was destroyed. I wish we did know. It would have made this article much juicier.

(4 ACs/2 Users/6 Total)
Support
 * 1)  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 00:05, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 10:09, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Hee hee hee&hellip;--Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:58, November 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Providing that Toprawa's objections are addressed.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:52, November 16, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 21:24, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:01, November 23, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * What exactly is "The Old Republic" meant to link to? The SW:TOR game? Please fix this redirect: "Simple math was used based upon the dating schemes in The Old Republic timelines."
 * 3) **Fixed. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:55, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) * Can we find a better way to word this? I understand what you're saying, it just doesn't read well: "over the next greater than–nine thousand years"
 * 5) **Sure. Is this better? &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:55, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) *Not an objection, but I've gone through (save for the instance in the second objection) and reworded mentions of, for example, "one thousand" to numerics for ease of readability and to keep with something of a site precedent. Toprawa and Ralltiir 19:13, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Sorry about that, Toprawa. Habits of off-wikia scholarly writing. Thanks for the review. &mdash; Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 23:55, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ***No problem at all. Thanks and good work. Toprawa and Ralltiir 03:01, November 23, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Shar Dakhan

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:47, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Heh. I was worried that I couldn't get this over 250 words.

(1 ACs/2 Users/3 Total)
Support
 * 1) Nostalgia. —Tommy9281  Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 05:24, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Farl got everything I came up with already. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:02, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) For Sandokan! --Skippy Farlstendoiro 11:21, November 13, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) For Farlstendoiro!
 * 2) * No quotes? Rewording: As there are quotes available, would you consider adding one or more?
 * 3) **Quotes added.
 * 4) * ..."ruled over the world of Ch'hodos, which served as his central base,[1] located in the northern part of the Unknown Regions...[2]" I understand you want to reduce footnotes to a minimum, which is laudable, but I suggest rewording this sentence, as it seems that "his base is located in the northern part".
 * 5) **Addressed.
 * 6) *" were repelled and eventually defeated." This seems important, do we know any details? Battle, opposing commanders, anything?
 * 7) **Entire end of the bio has been changed.
 * 8) * Shar Dakhan? Related to San Dokan? --Skippy Farlstendoiro 07:20, November 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) Tommy:
 * 10) * It appears that Shar Dakhan led the assault on Coruscant, so you might want to expand the article to reflect this.
 * 11) **Yeah, addressed.
 * 12) * To touch on Skippy's point above, there are quotes, as found in First Encounter.
 * 13) **Addressed.
 * 14) * As usual, there is some underlinking. A Wookieepedian of your caliber should not have to be reminded repeatedly of things like this. Please address.
 * 15) **Addressed.
 * 16) *That's all. —Tommy9281 Dark side Master SWGTCG.jpg ( No truth in me ) 16:00, November 6, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) It isn't clear in the intro who wins the Battle of Coruscant: "Dakhan's forces were opposed by a numerically inferior group of Jedi and Republic soldiers, but they were defeated." "They" could refer to either group: please specify.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 22:40, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) *Addressed.
 * 19) One more: "Dakhan later accompanied Sadow's invasion force in the Great Hyperspace War, and personally commanded the Sith attack on the Republic capital of Coruscant. Sadow demanded that Dakhan and the Sith force capture Coruscant..." The chronology here seems to be out of order. You say that he personally commanded the attack, and then you say that Sadow ordered him to attack. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:16, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Comments

Vontaige

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:07, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yet another minor TOTJ character!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:52, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Good work.  Grunny  ( Talk ) 16:17, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 21:33, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 01:56, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) -- Xd1358  Talk 07:14, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Vontaige served as one of the top advisors to Empress Teta, the ruler of the seven unified worlds of the Koros system, and was an important general in Teta's military. Vontaige served under Teta in the Unification Wars of the Koros system, fighting against rebels on the world of Kirrek. Teta was victorious in the Unification Wars, and Vontaige took his place at her side as one of her top advisors. This is chronologically a little confusing. You start out with him being a top adviser, then him fighting the rebels, and then him becoming a top advisor (again). Please clarify. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 22:21, November 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 01:16, November 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) *** Little repetitive setence beginnings now. Vontaige, Vontaige served as, Vontaige served under. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 01:32, November 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Addressed.

Comments

Tandun III

 * Nominated by:Apotheoses Jedi 20:40, November 12, 2009 (UTC-6)
 * Nomination comments:

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 * 1) Please go through and read all of the nomination rules at the top of this page. At the very least, the entire article needs to be properly sourced, not just a few random infobox items. Also, your intro is rather disproportionate to the article's size.  CC7567  (talk) 04:24, November 13, 2009 (UTC)

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Llaban

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 04:11, November 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Floyd strikes again!

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 * 1) Soresu, with a legato touch
 * 2) *Its unclear in the intro how he goes from Rebel leader to Tetan commander. Please clarify.
 * 3) **Addressed.
 * 4) ***Still confusing. You need to mention the amnesty, otherwise there seems to be no motive. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:21, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Addressed.
 * 6) * In the body, you haven't explained his motives for joining the Tetan forces, which according ot the quote is amnesty.
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * The large Sith fleet appeared and the sky, Doesn't make sense. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 09:30, November 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) **Bah! Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:17, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

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Atar

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 23:34, November 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: My Galactic Alliance Security trooper nom number 9&hellip;hopefully you're not too sick of them yet :P

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 * 1) Sick of them? hmm. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 23:39, November 14, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:34, November 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  CC7567  (talk) 21:38, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 04:43, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

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Rasher Ke'e

 * Nominated by: Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 17:43, November 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Yeah, another quick n' easy GAS officer. One more for LE

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 * 1) Quick, easy read. :P  JangFett  (Talk) 22:12, November 15, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:06, November 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) I have a thing for quick and easy Bothan females.  Graestan ( Talk ) 00:17, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 08:05, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 21:41, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

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Saren Llalik

 * Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 15:36, November 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Meet the designer of Lobot's cybernetic implant, according to West End Games.

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 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:22, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * The intro is way too short. 1 sentence for an 750 word (guess) article?
 * 3) * Expand on some of her other appearances in the BTS.
 * 4) * Any other quotes? SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:52, November 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) **All done. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:18, November 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) Skippy, please go back and check the sizes of your paragraphs. For instance, I see a short sentence for the intro, followed by two paragraphs. This occurs in the bio as well. Please keep the sizes consistent.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:34, November 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) *Other than quotes, all paragraphs are now 3-4 lines, except for two (one 2-liner, one 5-liner) that I cannot imagine how to avoid. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:26, November 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) The Grand Master
 * 9) *"Alliance General Airen Cracken considered himself to be in debt with Llalik." Why/how was he in debt to her? Without this information, this statement's placement in the intro doesn't make sense; it doesn't really fit in.
 * 10) *"She considered Nashiak was wrong serving the Empire, probably not considering the Imperial's atrocities." The meaning here is unclear; I assume you are trying to say that Saren thought that her sister wasn't considering the Imperial atrocities, but this is somewhat ambiguous. Also, why the uncertainty here? "Probably?" Was it the reason, or wasn't it? If it can't be confirmed, it must be removed.
 * 11) *More to come. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:28, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

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Hoover

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 07:49, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: ~500 words. No appropriate lead quotes.

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 * 1) You've picked up the first vote.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:48, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Maybe Jabba tolerated his blood-sucking because he kept the palace floor free of dirt and debris? ~ SavageBob 16:07, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 15:57, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Though I'm not a fan of the vampire-like elements.  CC7567  (talk) 21:46, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Skippy hoovering details.
 * 2) * Bts: If you detail the probable origin of the monniker "Hoover", you should also detail it for the monniker "Dogephant".
 * 3) **The origins of Hoover were specifically referred to in the referenced source, which is why I've put it in. Dogephant has not been canonically explained, although I suppose I could do so.
 * 4) * Bts: This has been treated as in error. By whom? By later canon sources, by the current article...?
 * 5) **Clarified.
 * 6) * Let me see. The Encyclopedia says that there were two small aliens from a species that the Enc. does not specify: Mr. Attark and Mr. Hoover. Is it what you mean? Thus, maybe there was a second, unseen Hoover at Jabba's, known as Mr. Hoover? I mean, the Weequays were known as "the Weequays" for a long time; and we try not to assume that sources are mistaken.
 * 7) **Yes - I was originally writing the article to include a Hoover, but it became absurd. The characteristics and skills of each are all repeated. Seeing as the CSWE was divided into four authors, it is pretty much a given that the two were written separately and not harmonized. --Eyrezer 09:46, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) *Sometimes BtS is richer than the article... in objections, at least. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 08:35, November 20, 2009 (UTC)

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Schenor

 * Nominated by: jSarek 10:05, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Eyrezer has been pressuring me for a while to nom this. Well, finally, enough redlinks have been knocked out to give it a go.

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 * 1) I salute you to the stupendous sub-sphere of species beginning with an S. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:04, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Meow. ~ SavageBob 17:22, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) --Eyrezer 20:14, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  CC7567  (talk) 20:43, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Object ~ SavageBob 16:40, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) Skippy understands your plight
 * 2) * Scientific name is only given in the intro. No information should be only in the intro.
 * 3) **Fixed.
 * 4) * Society: "Martial arts" could be linked to unarmed combat.
 * 5) **We should probably have a separate martial art article, but this will do.
 * 6) * Society: Context for Rhamsis Callo in the body (not the introduction). Simply "The architecture on their homeworld, Rhamsis Callo,"
 * 7) **Addressed.
 * 8) * History: "However" is used twice in consecutive sentences.
 * 9) **Fixed.
 * 10) * History: Was the Schenor research station manned by Imps or by Schenors? Were the mercenaries locals or aliens? Who sent them? (Tell the reader even if the fighters did not know at that point). Context to that part, please.
 * 11) **First part is answered. The second and third parts aren't really discussed in the adventure, other than the mercenaries are a "motley" group and they are picked up by an Imperial gunboat, suggesting Imperial ties.
 * 12) * Hist: "they are not seeking" - Should be in past tense. Check all the text to confirm there's nothing else in wrong tense.
 * 13) **Fixed. Didn't notice any other present tense mistakes, but I missed THAT one in the first place, so who knows ...
 * 14) * Eyrezer also used that tactic with me. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 10:25, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) **He certainly can be persuasive, can't he? jSarek 11:56, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) Prepare to be savaged...
 * 17) * I think the article's mostly fine, but there are some things that should maybe be linked and stubbed but aren't: felinoid, ground-effect vehicle. If you're feeling really ambitions, you could stub the unidentified Imperial commander and the Galactic Empire–Rhamis Call treaty. :)
 * 18) **Linked the first two as is, and created conjecturally-titled articles at "Schenor-Imperial treaty" and "Imperial ambassador to Rhamsis Callo."
 * 19) * The infobox converts their height to metric, but the main article includes it in Imperial measurements. Can this be standardized? Either way, you should indicate somewhere that the original adventure uses Imperial.
 * 20) **Text references now metric; I think the existing quote in the Bts establishes the adventure uses Imperial measurement.
 * 21) * Is it possible to speculate a range of dates in which this adventure might have taken place based on the fact that Luke is a commander?
 * 22) **Broadly; Skywalker was promoted shortly after the evacuation of Yavin, and the adventure refers to Rebels, indicating it ended before Endor. Note in this vein has been added.
 * 23) * The young ones are called "hatchlings?" Do they hatch from eggs, or is just a name? Either way, this should probably be mentioned in the "Society and culture" section.
 * 24) **The term is used only once without elaboration, so I can't say for sure they hatch from eggs, but it seems likely given the lack of any other reason to use the term that I can think of. I added a note about it to the "Biology and appearance" section, since hints of oviparous reproduction seem more relevant in that section.
 * 25) * Much of the "History" section should probably be between and  templates. Nice work!
 * 26) **Ugh, hate those templates. Oh well, added where appropriate. jSarek 07:43, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

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 * Is there a specific reason on why the scientific name is in the body but not the intro?  CC7567  (talk) 20:43, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

Lellish

 * Nominated by: --Eyrezer 13:15, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

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 * 1) Lellish sounds hellish. Or not. ~ SavageBob 16:19, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *This should allow you to nominate Lizard Warrior for FA. --Eyrezer 21:47, November 20, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Grunny  ( Talk ) 16:38, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 04:11, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 20:46, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

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TX-21

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 15:19, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Another dim-headed tactical droid. :P

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 * 1) -- Xd1358  Talk 20:07, November 21, 2009 (UTC)

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 * 1) Xd: Minor objection, I might read through it later.
 * 2) * Mention the Clone Wars both in the intro and the body.
 * 3) *-- Xd1358  Talk 15:20, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) **Addressed.  JangFett  (Talk) 15:23, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * The only thing I noticed was that you could vary TX-21 in the body with the "droid" and/or the "tactical droid". Otherwise, great work. -- Xd1358  Talk 19:34, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Addressed; thanks for the review. :)  JangFett  (Talk) 19:55, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) Attack of the Clone
 * 8) *Mentioning the battle in both the intro and body without specifying the Republic's intention of attacking the foundry makes mentioning the battle at all close to pointless. The intro in particular does not do a very good job at this, while the body needs to be phrased better.
 * 9) *In the intro, please make it clearer that both Poggle and TX-21 confronted the Padawans.
 * 10) *"While the ongoing events continued" is extremely redundant. I've already changed this, but please keep this in mind.
 * 11) *Quote captions are not sentences.
 * 12) *The Galaxy at War info is in the infobox and yet never mentioned in the body. Please fix this.
 * 13) *"The Galactic Republic force mounted an attack on Poggle's new droid foundry, which concerned the Geonosian Archduke." Lack of clarity here.
 * 14) *"on their adversary" is not a proper English idiom.
 * 15) *"of the intruders that breached the foundry": I don't see the point of specifying the "intruders" at their second mention instead of their first.
 * 16) *Please get in the objective of the Padawans' mission.
 * 17) *"TX-21 next to Poggle the Lesser" is an image caption extremely borderlining an IU perspective. Please fix this.
 * 18) *Saying "near TX-21" is a detail that needs to have more clarification. It seems irrelevant otherwise.
 * 19) *"TX-21 showed his gratitude toward the Geonosian Archduke." How?
 * 20) *The Characteristics section is rambling a lot, and overall, you need to do a better job of linking his noteworthy actions to his characteristics.
 * 21) *"On his chest, TX-21 has bug-like markings, which fitted his role as a Geonosian adviser." Please rephrase this and find the error that should be standing out like a flashing siren.
 * 22) *"The droid made its debut": is it a "he" or "it"? Please make up your mind.
 * 23) *The reason that most of these objections seem like they're is because they are. Jang, I know that you can do a better job and that I shouldn't have to ask you to clarify anything in your writing anymore. The rest of what I have to say is what I've already said to you: please work on your proofreading skills, as a lot of these errors could have been caught by them.  CC7567  (talk) 21:04, November 22, 2009 (UTC)

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CT-327

 * Nominated by:  JangFett  (Talk) 19:52, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: A minor clone; part of my Rookies project.

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 * 1) The Grand Master
 * 2) *I'm seeing multiple grammatical errors throughout the article.
 * 3) *"While most clone troopers stationed on the listening post were rookies, inexperienced and younger troopers, CT-327 was given the task of guarding the base outside, while the rest of the stationed clones were inside the listening post." This jumps around from one subject to the next and reads rather confusingly.
 * 4) *"While most of the clones stationed at the station were rookies, or "shinies," inexperienced and younger troopers who were pressed into service due to the need of clones in the war, the clone troopers stationed at the Republic listening post had to watch for Confederare activity in the Outer Rim and warn the Republic fleet near Kamino of any attack." Once again, this jumps around and reads rather confusingly.
 * 5) *"As he removed his visor to check the nearby object that suddenly appeared..." What nearby object? The droid that had just popped up beside him? This series of events is confusing. Please clarify.
 * 6) *In the intro you say one of the droids shocked him, while in the bio you imply that multiple droids shocked him. Which is correct?
 * 7) *"Listening post" is repetitive in the first sentence of the P&T.
 * 8) *"After the commando droids left their boarding ships, the clone failed to destroy one of the commando droids that surprised attacked him." You make it sound as if he tried to attack them, which, IIRC, he didn't get the chance to do. Also, does this really belong in the P&T? And check your grammar, please
 * 9) * Jonjedigrandmaster ( Jedi Beacon ) 00:16, November 23, 2009 (UTC)

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Alexem

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 21:33, November 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Random Squib geezer.

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