Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Third Battle of Coruscant (Galactic Civil War)


 * ''The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Third Battle of Coruscant (Galactic Civil War)

 * Nominated by: -- Darth tom (talk)  21:55, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: I referenced it after a discussion with Jedimca0 and, although short, I feel it's good to go.

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Object  IFYLOFD  ( And now, young Skywalker, you will die. ) 01:59, 27 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 1) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 2) * Context on Thrawn, Drayson, Bel Iblis, and Mothma. Also some on the Battle of Bilbringi and the crystal gravfield trap.
 * 3) * You have Rieekan, Pellaeon, Home Guard Fleet, DP-20 gunships, X-wings, B-wings, v-150 ion cannons, Steadfast, Chimaera, and Death's Head all listed in the infobox - but they are absent from the body of the article.
 * 4) * After Molo Himron and his team sent into the Imperial Palace on Coruscant to capture the Solo twins and incriminate Mara Jade failed to capture the twins - pretty confusing as is. Should probably be broken into two sentences or reworded.
 * 5) *Also, which Steadfast are you referring to? Currently, what you're linking to is a disambig page. Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 15:19, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 6) **First one's sorted. What do you mean by the second? -- Darth tom (talk)  08:30, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) ***Fixed. -- Darth tom [[Image:Imperial Emblem.svg|20px]] (Imperial Intelligence)  15:49, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 8) Lacking prelude section and significant amount of detail. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 10:55, 22 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 9) There are seven sources, yet you only use one, and I know some of these sources hold new info. Expand on those, and add a prelude section. DC 01:46, 24 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 10) SoresuMakashi
 * 11) *Quotes?
 * 12) *How did C'boath take control of the Chimaera's crew? Through physical force? Also change C'boath's taking control to something else.
 * 13) *Multiple sentences could use some rephrasing. I've fixed up a few in the prelude, but the rest is up to you.
 * 14) *One or two redunudant sentences and uses of the same word twice close to each other. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie ) 09:44, 26 November 2008 (UTC)
 * 15) Floyd is in the house:
 * 16) *Context needed on Jorus C'Baoth, the Solo twins, Molo Himron, Dorja, and Rieekan.
 * 17) *Split some paragraphs up in The battle section.
 * 1) From the Desk of Atarumaster88
 * 2) *Intro is unclear and could be expanded easily.
 * 3) *Per DC on needing to use more sources.
 * 4) *Horrible lack of linking in prelude. Please address.
 * 5) *"Despite C'baoth's belief that the Grand Admiral wouldn't do as he had commanded, and the fact that C'baoth took control of the Chimaera and its crew, Thrawn agreed to prepare the attack on Coruscant, after replacing the crew on the Chimaera injured by C'baoth's taking control with a five hundred man caretaker crew from Captain Dorja." Massive run-on, and very unclear to boot.
 * 6) *Contextify Draklor, Death's Head, etc. A simple class name or whatever will suffice.
 * 7) *What is a Katana Dreadnaught? Is that a proper canonical term?
 * 8) *"were thoroughly outmatched by Grand Admiral Thrawn's tactical skill" POV here.
 * 9) *Per Floyd on both objections.
 * 10) *I don't think The Last Command ever says that the CGT array was captured, and Karrde gave them the information that the asteroids were all destroyed. Please correct.
 * 11) *The Aftermath section should have some more information from the Imperial point of view.
 * 12) *The casualties section is incorrect. Evanrue was destroyed, and Imperial forces did lose some fighters and such IIRC. Whatever the case, that should be more thoroughly spelled out.
 * 13) *Ground-based weaponry (in particularly, an ion cannon is mentioned) should be included in the New Republic strength figures.
 * 14) *Nice to see you trying to broaden your horizons with some Wookieepedia GAs, but this will take some work. As always, though, have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. Atarumaster88  [[Image:Jedi_Order.svg|20px]] ( Talk page ) 05:21, 8 December 2008 (UTC)

Comments

AC Removal Vote

 * 1) Darth tom has not contributed to the article since November, and this nom appears dead to me. DC 04:52, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Numerous outstanding objections over a month old. Toprawa and Ralltiir 15:41, 5 January 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Grand Moff Tranner [[Image:Imperial Department of Military Research.svg|20px]] (Comlink) 00:57, 6 January 2009 (UTC)