Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Jabba the Hutt's Will

Jabba the Hutt's Will

 * Nominated by: -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 20:21, May 17, 2010 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: You can never have enough Jedi Prince

Support

 * 1) May your login not evaporate. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 18:01, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 2)  StarNeptune Talk to me! 06:38, May 24, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) GoDV! Xicer9 [[Image:atgar.svg|20px]]( Combadge) 21:17, May 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4) Imperialles 00:01, May 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5) Excellent work from Acky as usual. Graestan ( Talk ) 16:28, May 31, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) Interesting stuff! And clean, to boot. Thefourdotelipsis 07:16, June 3, 2010 (UTC)

Object

 * Farl: If "The recording [was] entitled JTHW", shouldn't you begin the intro with "Jabba the Hutt's Will, entitled JTHW and also known as Jabba's true will and testament (as per NEGC)"? Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:20, May 18, 2010 (UTC)
 * Does that look good? -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 16:27, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * If you're going to mention the marriage contradiction in the BTS, you need to make note of the Rotta contradiction too. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 00:34, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Well there's not really an explicit contradiction - we don't know what happens to Rotta and we don't know when the will was made - but I've added a brief mention. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:56, May 21, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Darth Trayus ( Trayus Academy ) 07:27, May 22, 2010 (UTC)

A few things:

 * Introduction: "Jabba's criminal empire was once against gobbled up"&mdash;isn't gobbled up a little informal?
 * Good point, changed.
 * History: "ruled an expansive, lucrative criminal empire before his death. However he was killed" This reads a little awkwardly. Both sentences establish that Jabba died, but sentence 2 seems to ignore the mention of death in sentence 1. If that makes any sense. Anyway, would it be possible to reword?
 * Done.
 * History: "but after brutal internecine conflict" Is this supposed to read "*a* brutal internecine conflict"? It might not, so I'm just asking. I'd fix it myself if I were certain!
 * Well either is grammatically correct, but as is it's presented as more of a general conflict as opposed to a clearly defined, single one, if that makes sense.
 * BTS: Maybe switch around the order in which "Hutt! Hutt! Hutt!" and NEGC are presented, to better reflect the actual chronology.
 * Done.
 * Apart from that, excellent as usual. --Imperialles 06:01, May 25, 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 21:08, May 28, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

 * I may be mistaken, but didn't the will of Jabba also appear in The Jabba Tape? --Borsk Fey'lya  Talk 16:49, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Right you are. Hmmm, well that complicates matters a little bit, but I'll have updated by tomorrow evening, hopefully. Thanks for pointing it out, Borsk. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 17:22, May 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * Should be good now. -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 18:56, May 21, 2010 (UTC)