Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Comet (clone trooper)

Comet (clone trooper)

 * Nominated by: - 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 22:43, January 28, 2012 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments:

Jangston

 * First off, I see many issues with the article. At the moment, the article seems to be nowhere near good article standards. Besides grammatical errors, your source list is far from complete, infobox isn't reloaded, lack of quotes (IIRC, he spoke a few times), lack of references and speculation in various places, poor linking in certain places, and your behind the scenes needs to be reorganized (something that you should worry about later on). Right now, you must take care of the sources and thoroughly check the article for any grammatical issues, as well as following GAN rules 1 and 9. Because of the issues that are present in the article, I cannot give it an in-depth review yet. Please see what you can do to correct these problems. Not really an objection, but you could also obtain new images for the article as well. The intro needs to be proportioned to the body of the article as well.  JangFett  (Talk) 23:03, January 28, 2012 (UTC)
 * Thanks for looking it over. I've already started to add more sources but I will not be able to accomplish much before I leave.--- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 00:00, January 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * I think I can source the first sentence of P&T to Padawan lost too. This is becasue Comet's appearence in that episode proved that fact I think.--- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 01:26, January 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * Be sure to check all episode guides, including the old, TCW kid magazines, TCW UK kid magazines, sourcebooks, such as the UK Season 1 & 2 guide. Also, "As a corporal, Comet was an effective soldier who knew what to do if a problem arouse." Sounds very OR sounding/viewer-poi. Unless a source states that he was an effective soldier, however.  JangFett  (Talk) 04:28, January 29, 2012 (UTC)
 * How do you think I should word it instead? Also, I have revamped the Vanqor section and was wondering if you could see if that section was good article quality. Thanks,--- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 20:54, February 4, 2012 (UTC)
 * Anything that avoids speculative terms. However, if you can't find a source for that, it's best to leave it out then. Also, in addition to the source list, the entire article needs a thorough copy-edit. Make sure that you follow all of our policies, including the Manual of Style. I'm seeing a lot of linking and grammatical issues still.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:02, February 5, 2012 (UTC)
 * Quotes added. I will reword the P&T section soon, but I am done for today.--- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 22:35, February 5, 2012 (UTC)
 * As I went through the article to focus on Comet, I checked over grammar and spelling a little. Is it any better than before?-- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 00:11, February 13, 2012 (UTC)
 * Also, is the POV better?-- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 21:01, February 13, 2012 (UTC)
 * While the pov is adequate now, please go back and see what you can do about cutting down information that doesn't pertain to Comet. There isn't much but there is information that could be shortened. Also, as I mentioned before, please check the sources, your grammar and linking. Thoroughly check the entire article before I can continue my review.  JangFett  (Talk) 00:19, February 14, 2012 (UTC)

Talrrivanian

 * Like Jang, I believe this is not GA quality. Consider doing a extensive grammmer/spelling check.
 * With all his missions, the focus seems to be more on the mission then on Comet, since this is Comet's aricle, the focus should be mainly on him, not the mission.
 * I know. However, Comet is seen very little in the missions and does not play a huge role, so I just pretty much did an over view of the mission. If its ok With both you and Jang, I'll cut a bunch out to focus on Comet, but I'll wait for you to reply before I do it.-- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 21:06, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
 * The POV should stay on Comet and not on the mission. You have to treat the article as if you're following Comet, if that makes sense, since it's his article, not the battle article in which Comet participated in. So what you should do is go through the entire article and see where Comet was in and was not in. If he took part of the mission alongside others, then you could say "Comet and ...." or something along those lines.  JangFett  (Talk) 21:10, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
 * Ok, I'll start butchering the article's POV into submission soon.-- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 21:22, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
 * Like Jang said.
 * I've gone through and refocused on Comet. I was wondering if you could look it over and see if the article was any better.-- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 00:11, February 13, 2012 (UTC)
 * Seems good to me. Find someone elses opinion to make sure and go through the article again to make sure u didn't mess anything up when u rewrote it.
 * All for now, prob more later.-- Talrrivanian JaingHead.svg ( Headquarters ) 13:21, February 8, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

 * I will not be able to edit from Jan 29 to Feb 4 due to a school trip, so I will address all objections when I get back--- 501st Dogma Republic_emblem.png( Comlink ) 22:43, January 28, 2012 (UTC)