Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/CC-1004


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CC-1004

 * Nominated by: Lord Hydronium 11:26, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Four months, one hiatus, and an hour of watching poorly-filmed German Jedi Alliance videos. This is what I have to show for it.

(5 Inqs/1 Users/6 Total)
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 * 1) CC7567  [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] (s)talk 22:26, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Thefourdotelipsis 03:17, 22 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 11:53, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:24, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  19:48, 3 May 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 03:37, 4 May 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) A look from a clone (...at another clone...sheesh.)
 * 2) * "Gree" is mentioned twice in the first paragraph of the intro, and yet the second mention is the one that's bolded. Because it isn't bolded, he first mention makes it briefly sound like you're talking about an entirely different person, before it's clarified later.
 * 3) **Gah, that's an artifact of moving the bolded Gree to the end. Fixed.
 * 4) * Can quotes be found for the body?
 * 5) **Eh...I didn't remember any particularly exciting ones from TCW or ROTS besides the lead—most of the dialogue is pretty situational—so I just gave it the required one. If you have any good ones, though, feel free to add them.
 * 6) ***Added quotes for multiple sections. Not sure if some of them fit, though; you can arrange them if you want to.
 * 7) ****Works for me. The Gunray one in the section before his actual capture is the only one I might be iffy on, but I'm sure it's been done before. - Lord Hydronium 01:55, 12 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) * Why exactly was Gunray to be taken to Coruscant?
 * 9) **Explained (and fixed in the intro).
 * 10) * Even though it's quite obvious that Argyus was a traitor, you might want to mention it directly.
 * 11) **Addeded.
 * 12) * "Argyus got a kick on the commander": language is rather confusing.
 * 13) **Me no speak the Englishes good. Fixed.
 * 14) * "Argyus soon received a signal by comlink, from a now-outmatched Ventress, and turned on his fellow commandos, shooting them to death." It sounds a bit like the commandos required more than one shot to be killed.
 * 15) **Rejiggered.
 * 16) * You might want to consider moving the reference on which two Jedi accompanied Gree in Jedi Alliance to the Bts, because it's more of a footnote, and the reader is more likely to see it if it's in the Bts.
 * 17) **I actually originally had it in the BTS, but decided to move it; it's quite specific to that particular paragraph, so I thought it best if the explanation was linked to right there rather than placed among the rest of the general comments in the BTS. For what it's worth, footnotes on specific continuity notes do have a lot of precedent. - Lord Hydronium 21:57, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 18) ***Understood. &mdash; CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] (s)talk 22:26, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) *The article is looking great. &mdash; CC7567 [ http://images1.wikia.nocookie.net/starwars/images/thumb/5/5f/Rex.png/20px-Rex.png] (s)talk 21:25, 11 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) From the Moffship of Grand Moff Tranner:
 * 21) * I think the GAR (at least) should be listed in the infobox as an affiliation.
 * 22) **I have no problem one way or the other on this, I'm just not sure this is what we generally do. You can keep for now or strike the objection, but if anyone knows whether we have a consensus on how deep we go on affiliations, I'd like to know.
 * 23) ***I think this should be brought up in a CT some time in the future, but for now, it's no big deal. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:24, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 24) * "Gree was killed by Yoda attempting to fulfill the order." - almost sounds like Yoda was following Order 66. Please reword.
 * 25) **Reworded.
 * 26) * A little more context on Amidala's capture on Rodia is needed, I think.
 * 27) **Discussed in IRC.
 * 28) * Are you positive that the Prima guide for Star Wars: The Clone Wars: Jedi Alliance was referring to Gree when they mentioned a "Kree?"
 * 29) **Yeah, it's referring to Gree's parts in the game, I'm told. - Lord Hydronium 23:22, 28 April 2009 (UTC)
 * 30) *Well done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 23:04, 28 April 2009 (UTC)

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