Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Voolvif Monn


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(6 Inqs/1 User/7 Total)
Support
 * 1) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 15:58, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 2)  Graestan ( Talk ) 02:58, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 3) Well-written.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:19, 10 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 4) Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:40, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 5) Green Tentacle (Talk) 14:42, 14 April 2008 (EDT)
 * 6) Gonkified.  Gonk  ( Gonk! ) 21:11, 14 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 7) -- Redundant Guy 02:40, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Oppose
 * 1) Toprawa:
 * 2) * Please elaborate on this a little to bit to explain why he was sent there: "Monn was one of a team of Jedi sent to Geonosis"
 * 3) **Added a bit, though I'm not sure it's entirely necessary in the intro.
 * 4) * Is "cubling" the canonical term used? Not "cub?": " who found that the young cubling had"
 * 5) **Databank entry says "cubling."
 * 6) * This is all very redundant. Please reword where appropriate: "had great potential in the ways of the Force. Monn was taken to be trained in the ways of the Jedi and the Light side of the Force"
 * 7) **Altered a bit.
 * 8) * In this picture caption, can you reword or add to this to specify what battle he is fighting in: "Monn during the Clone Wars."
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) * I really don't care whether or not you put periods at the end of your picture captions or not, though they should be done in accordance with wiki's style, as we discussed earlier. But, whatever you do choose, please pick one way and stick with it.
 * 11) **Will do; addressed.
 * 12) * Saying here that they were dispatched to fight the CIS in a Clone Wars battle seems kind of redundant. Unless you can say that they fought, maybe, a specific/notable element of the CIS, I would recommend removing that part: "Later in the war, during the Outer Rim Sieges, Monn and his fellow Jedi Agen Kolar and Aayla Secura were dispatched to an ice-covered planet to fight the CIS"
 * 13) **I changed the wording slightly, but removing it outright makes it looks really odd, IMHO.
 * 14) * You say in his P&T that he raised himself, but in the bio you merely say he was orphaned. Being orphaned doesn't necessarily equate to having to raise yourself, I feel. Please specify in his bio that he did this.
 * 15) **Altered.
 * 16) * I think it would be pertinent to add a little bit to the BTS to explain that his name is obviously derived from the very creature from which he was created - "Wolf Man." Toprawa and Ralltiir 06:25, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 17) **Addressed. Thanks again for the review. :-) -- AdmirableAckbar (Talk) 23:25, 12 April 2008 (UTC)
 * 18) ***My pleasure. You're an FA Machine to be reckoned with. :P Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:40, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments

'''Approved by Inquisitorius 18:00, 16 April 2008 (UTC)