Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Second Battle of Korriban (Great Hyperspace War)


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Second Battle of Korriban (Great Hyperspace War)

 * Nominated by:  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 03:12, December 9, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Ho-hum.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
 * 1) SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:51, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:04, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 3) Kreivi Wolter 16:29, January 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 4)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  22:09, February 12, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 04:20, February 18, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Soresu
 * 2) * Seeing that surrender was their only option, Dakhan ordered suicide attacks on the Republic forces, Clearly, surrender was not their only option if they managed to suicide attack.
 * 3) **Not really. The Atlas, which is the source I went to get info on this stage of the battle, says "When it became clear that surrender was their only option, acting Dark Lord Shar Dakhan ordered his warriors into suicide attacks against the invading fleet."
 * 4) ***Well that makes no sense to me. If they did something else then surrender wasn't the only option. Sigh. Whatever the Atlas says. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 05:51, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) * You missed a description of the aftermath quote, so the source has become the description instead, and there is no ref tag. SoresuMakashi ( Everything I tell you is a lie  the truth  ) 11:16, December 17, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) **Addressed.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:26, December 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) The Grand Master
 * 8) * Why the speculation here? "but the Koros forces, with numbers on their side and fueled by Teta's rhetoric, seemed too much." Also, the meaning is unclear. "Seemed too much" for what?
 * 9) **There isn't speculation in the sentence, or at least not intentionally. Reworded.
 * 10) * "The Sith Empire had fallen." Awfully short and choppy, and I can't help but feel that it's somewhat redundant. Please combine it or remove.
 * 11) **Removed.
 * 12) * The Great Hyperspace War template says that the Gank Massacres is the following conflict, whereas the infobox currently lists the Great Droid Revolution. Which is correct?
 * 13) **Gank Massacre seems to be correct. Changed.
 * 14) *Nice work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:02, December 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) **Thanks for the review.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 06:00, January 1, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) Toprawa:
 * 17) * I had you create the Koros army article for one of your other TOTJ battle noms and asked you to go ahead and update the links in your other battle noms, which you clearly you have not done. This needs to be handled before I even think about reviewing any further. Full and accurate linking is a necessity in writing and reviewing articles, Floyd. Not an option. Toprawa and Ralltiir 02:48, February 7, 2010 (UTC)
 * 18) **Bah on a stick. I totally forgot about that. My mistake. I went ahead and did it just now, so check it out.  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:08, February 9, 2010 (UTC)
 * 19) ***The link for Koros Army is now obsolete, as you can see by clicking. And, you still haven't linked every mention of the Teta's forces in the article. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:32, February 20, 2010 (UTC)
 * 20) ****Changed, but I had already linked to it in both the intro and the body. The link to the article in the body is in the "Prelude" section, in case you missed it.
 * 21) Attack of the Clone
 * 22) * Fact tag in the article.
 * 23) **Addressed.
 * 24) *Watch linking and formatting, please.  CC7567  (talk) 21:08, February 14, 2010 (UTC)

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