Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Lorth Needa


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Lorth Needa

 * Nominated by: Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:44, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: After working on this for God-knows-how-long, I've finally decided to stop being lazy and nominate this.

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total/INQCON 5)
Support
 * 1) Per pre-nom review. Nice work.  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  23:00, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2)  The Flash  {talk} 02:09, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Well done. Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 05:00, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) --Skippy Farlstendoiro 12:15, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Noice, Tranner.  CC7567  (talk) 02:14, September 7, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) --  —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 11:44, September 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 20:14, September 18, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 23:29, September 20, 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) There's more info to be added from the Ep III novel. In the bio, talk about his communication with Yoda during the Invisible Hands descent. In the P&T, talk about his reaction to the Battle of Coruscant and his feelings on Palpatine, Skywalker, Kenobi, and the Republic.  Darth Trayus  Sith_Emblem.svg ( Trayus Academy ) 23:06, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) *I thought I was missing something. Done. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 17:08, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Farlstendoiro opposing
 * 4) * Bio/Republic Navy Service: The first paragraph does not specify whether Needa fired against Grievous's ship when he did not surrender. Later, I see Grievous's ship had been damaged by "Republic fire", but I still doubt whether Needa attacked, relented or was bluffing all the time. If that point is know, I think it should be specified.
 * 5) **The ROTS novel doesn't mention if Needa's Integrity fired upon the Hand at all.
 * 6) * Bio/Republic Navy Service: Last paragraph. Was Needa present during Palpatine's speech or not? I think the text wants me to assume he was, but I'm still not sure.
 * 7) **As it was a meeting of all Republic Navy officers, it is assumed that he was there. Regardless, the info is necessary to his bio.
 * 8) * Bio/Failure and death: that the "cave" it had hidden in. The inverted commas do not sound too encyclopedic to me. Suggestion: that the alleged/assumed/presumed/supposed cave it had hidden in.
 * 9) **Done.
 * 10) * P&T: Following the Rebellion Era Sourcebook, Needa can speak Ryl. Needa also studied specialized courses about the Empire or something ("Knowledge: The New Order" 5; not too high as a lieutenant Dragen has a 6), and he had an important level of specialized knowledge about the Imperial Navy ("Knowledge: Imperial Navy" 6; equaled only by Piett and surpased only by moff Harsh in Gamer #6, that I know). I feel those skills should be mentioned. His other RPG stats are not notable enough to be mentioned, IMHO (Astrogate 6 is not very high for a Navy captain).
 * 11) **Though I hate those statistics, done.
 * 12) * That's all. You're in command now, Grand Moff Tranner. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 09:06, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) **Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 12:11, 24 August 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) One minor thing: The bit about Virar seems a bit too concrete. It's not that Pedetsen believed that Lorth was a Rebel sympathizer, but that he was inventing a possible course of action for his commanding officer. --  Darth Culator  (Talk) 02:40, 1 September 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) *Fixed. Thanks for the review. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 11:09, 1 September 2009 (UTC)
 * 16) Marinara: A few cases I see of mixed tense. (Check the instances of "would.") It is better to avoid the conditional tenses altogether unless talking about in-universe speculation. &mdash;  Fiolli  {Alpheridies University ComNet} 16:09, September 4, 2009 (UTC)
 * 17) *I removed some instances, but the remaining cases of "would" are necessary. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:21, September 4, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * Note: On the advice of Toprawa, I'm going to get a few more images. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 22:46, 7 August 2009 (UTC)
 * You've got a faulty ref there at the moment. --Eyrezer 05:35, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Ugh. I forgot that I had something else referenced to ROTS. Thanks. Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 12:13, 20 August 2009 (UTC)