Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Morseerian


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Morseerian

 * Nominated by: ~ SavageBob 06:44, November 21, 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Eyrezer can't have all the four-armed species.

(5 Inqs/2 Users/7 Total)
Support
 * Oh, so now I'll have to do a four-armed species. Got one in my sights. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 16:08, November 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 1) --Eyrezer 06:31, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Grand Moff Tranner Imperial Department of Military Research.svg (Comlink) 16:36, December 19, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:46, December 31, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) Kreivi Wolter 17:01, January 14, 2010 (UTC)
 * 5)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:07, January 28, 2010 (UTC)
 * 6) —Tommy 9281  Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 04:47, January 30, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Skippy has little to add
 * 2) * S&C: talking to strangers only when they wanted information from them. Can you replace "they" or "them" with "the Morseerians" or "the strangers"?
 * 3) * Hist: Seriously, can you explain exactly what's a client species and what the Drackmarians expected from the Morseerians in exchange of what? Specially about an individual Morseerian having an individual contract with an individual Drackmarian (Nabrun-Omogg).
 * 4) * In the galaxy: I think the description of Anakin could be improved if you added Ani's age: "an eight-year old slave named Anakin" (If he was 8 at that point ). But, it's your choice.
 * 5) * In the galaxy: The paragraph about pirates takes place in 32 BBY; it's followed by a paragraph talking about 33 BBY. Please consider switching them to follow a chronological order.
 * 6) *Go WP:A! Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:25, November 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7) **Thanks for the suggestions! I've changed everything you mention except Anakin's age; I suck at BBY math, and his birth year is given as some weird decimal construct. I won't be upset if someone else wants to add in that information. Other that that, I hope the article's up to snuff now. ~ SavageBob 16:01, November 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) ***I added his age, which is nine years old. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 21:20, November 26, 2009 (UTC)
 * 9) ****Cool, thanks! ~ SavageBob 07:13, November 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) Similar to what I was after with Ranat, can you add a link to an image of the Morseerian-like guy on Aduba-3? --Eyrezer 21:13, November 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 11) *Done! ~ SavageBob 22:56, November 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 12) **Looks like it's probably the same guy. --Eyrezer 06:31, November 28, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) Cav's squadron briefing
 * 14) * I think it needs to be made explicit in the intro that the Morseerian homeworld is unknown; as I read it, I thought that Morseer was the homeworld until I saw the entry in the infobox. If I can draw that conclusion, so could others. - Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 10:06, January 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 15) **Thanks for the review. I've addressed the homeworld thing. Any better? ~ SavageBob 16:25, January 27, 2010 (UTC)
 * 16) Blacklist:
 * 17) * "after that species was defeated by the Galactic Empire..." Is there no specific article for this defeat of which you speak?
 * 18) * "Examples included Chall Bekan, Myor Devker, Shalthan Leeru, Nabrun Leids, Bargeth Relb, Nilek Rillion, and Flyrl Sacorbel." You introduce each of these characters (except for Nabrun) straight out of the blue at this point. Context on each of these, and what exactly they were examples of.
 * 19) * "Nearly a century later, Morseer fell within a region of space controlled by Darth Krayt as part of his Sith Empire..." Is there a specific year for this?
 * 20) * "Although far from common and rarely seen further toward the Core Worlds" I feel like it should say "rarely seen past the Core Worlds..." If I'm correct, can you reword this so it seems less confusing?
 * 21) * Small context on Decipher in the BtS.
 * 22) *Not bad, aside from a little cleaning up. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 23:56, January 29, 2010 (UTC)
 * 23) **Thank you very much for the review! I'll take your points one by one:
 * 24) ***There isn't much information known about the Drackmarians vs. the Empire except that the Drackmarians resisted the new government and were defeated and added to the Imperial fold. I could make a stub on the Drackmarian resistance if you think it's warranted, but it wouldn't be more than a line or two long, I think.
 * 25) ****Your explanation is sufficient, thanks. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 04:47, January 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 26) ***The examples you list are examples of names, not of individuals, although some of the examples are the names of known individuals. As such, I think they should be treated as names and not individuals and that no further context is warranted at this point in the article.
 * 27) ****Oh okay, I misunderstood. —Tommy 9281 Mechnochair negwt.jpg ( Mechno-chair ) 04:47, January 30, 2010 (UTC)
 * 28) ***I've made the time reference more specific.
 * 29) ***I think it's OK to base the spatial reference on the Morseerians' point of view, but I've changed from "Core Worlds" to "Coreward" to fit the Coreward/Spinward dichotomy.
 * 30) ***Decipher done. Thanks again for the review. ~ SavageBob 03:05, January 30, 2010 (UTC)

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