Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tarkov


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Tarkov

 * Nominated by: Kilson Likes PIE 9:40, 28 June 09 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Weird, two Clone Wars Chapter 22 noms back-to-back. :P

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)
Support
 * 1) Good job :P.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 16:05, 28 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Looks good after a copyedit. &mdash;Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 01:28, 29 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 3)  Cavalier One FarStar Logo.jpg( Squadron channel ) 09:12, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 4)  Mauser  Comlink 10:09, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 5)  CC7567  (talk) 00:04, 25 July 2009 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Jujiggum attacks the PIE
 * 2) * "In 19 BBY, during the Clone Wars, Tarkov took his son Jaccoba hunting when they stumbled upon a large Separatist invasion army." This reads rather awkwardly, please rephrase.
 * 3) * I'd change around the first sentence of the bio a bit; it's too similar to the first sentence of the intro. (Or you can change the intro sentence)
 * 4) * The second half of the first paragraph of the bio is a little too play-by-play; maybe cut it down a bit. (Not too much, just a little)
 * 5) * In the second paragraph of the bio you use "nearby" twice in the same sentence. Please change one of them.
 * 6) * "Tarkov was curious, wanting to find out why a supposed "plant" would be making metalic sounds after Jaccob's spear hit the disguised MTT." This is a little awkward/colloquial, please rephrase.
 * 7) * In the BTS: it is unclear whether this episode, or the whole series, originally aired on March 22.
 * 8) * "...and what happened to him after his brief appearance..." "What happened to him" is a little colloquial; could it be changed?
 * 9) *Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:19, 28 June 2009 (UTC)
 * 10) **How dare you attack the PIE. :P All of your objections are addressed, thanks for the review. Kilson Likes PIE 15:56, 28 June 09 (UTC)
 * 11) Attack of the Clone
 * 12) * Can you try and crop the infobox image so that it's only Tarkov? It's slightly misleading.
 * 13) * Specifically where in the DVD was Tarkov's namesake identified? Please be more specific.  CC7567  (talk) 00:48, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) Just a few.
 * 15) *It's almost the same as Jaccoba; this isn't a major objection, and if you're majorly opposed to it then that's alright, but couldn't you perhaps vary it a bit in relations to his son's article?
 * 16) *Did he act in a protective way to his son? That could be added to the P&T.
 * 17) **Not really, no.
 * 18) *Otherwise, good. -- Darth tom Imperial Emblem.svg (Imperial Intelligence)  20:16, 5 July 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) **Your other objection is addressed. Thanks for the reviews. Kilson Likes PIE 02:05, 17 July 09 (UTC)

Comments
 * I'm assuming that no appropriate quotes are available.  CC7567  (talk) 00:48, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
 * Not really, unless you want some growls. Kilson Likes PIE 18:05, 04 July 09 (UTC)
 * Kilson, I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to hold off voting until the CW DVD has been checked; otherwise, the article won't be confirmed to have proper source coverage. If you need help doing this, let me know, but please try.  CC7567  (talk) 23:55, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
 * I'm sure Kilson can handle it himself, but I can vouch that there's no new info about Tarkov in the DVD extras.  Mauser  Comlink 10:11, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
 * That's fine, then.  CC7567  (talk) 00:04, 25 July 2009 (UTC)