Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Skirmish at Vanqor


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Skirmish at Vanqor

 * Nominated by:  CC7567  (talk) 06:55, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Nomination comments: Well, I have to get the rest of the battles done sometime. Slightly over 1000 words.

(5 Inqs/3 Users/8 Total)
Support
 * 1)  Chack Jadson  (Talk)  11:42, September 5, 2009 (UTC)
 * 2) Looks clean to me --  —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 14:54, September 13, 2009 (UTC)
 * 3) Not to be confused with Vanquo. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk  08:47, September 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 4) XD Nice idea to put the gundark as a civilian. Kreivi Wolter 16:31, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) Looks very nice. Will make a fine FA. Jawaman Want to buy a used droid? 17:17, December 10, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6)  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 20:41, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 7)  IFYLOFD  ( Floyd's crib ) 01:52, December 25, 2009 (UTC)
 * 8) --Eyrezer 05:27, January 4, 2010 (UTC)

Object
 * 1) Nayayen
 * 2) * Could the opening sentence be reworded so that the actual title is bolded? Something like "This skirmish took place at Vanqor over and on the surface of the planet around 22 BBY..." or some such.
 * 3) **It could, but it still remains a conjecture title, and "skirmish" isn't mentioned anywhere throughout TCW-related material, which is why I chose not to do this.
 * 4) ***Skirmish on Rodia has skirmish as the bolded first mention of the title for a quick example. My interpretation is that the bold part should be the title of the article, be it conjectural or not. The article isn't about a Skirmish in general, it's about a specific Skirmish at Vanquo. I hope I'm making sense with this. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk  21:19, September 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 5) ****Either way is still acceptable, and I've already provided my reasoning on why I've chosen this formatting. Yes, it could be changed to your way, but I still prefer the current way and fail to see why I can't follow an already established precedent. Also, please leave GAs out of this. If you wanted to object to something, you should have done so during the nomination process, not bring it up on FANs to get me to change an issue of this level of importance.  CC7567  (talk) 04:44, September 23, 2009 (UTC)
 * 6) * The quotes should all use the appropriate templates. Without counting, I think all bar one should use Dialogue.
 * 7) **You're going to have to provide much more reasoning than superficiality for me to change this. In this case, the reader is capable of distinguishing the speakers without fancy templates that make it look like a script.
 * 8) ***Point taken, I simply thought from convention on QotD that those templates had to be used as such.
 * 9) * In "Prelude", why did they want to capture Dooku?
 * 10) **Addressed.
 * 11) * I think a note should be made in the Bts to say that this is not the same incident as when Kenobi and Skywalker "fell into that nest of Gundarks" (in AotC).
 * 12) **I see no reason why this is needed, and that didn't even take place during Episode II; it took place before it. If the two events can be distinguished by simple movie chronology and canon, it's irrelevant.  CC7567  (talk) 16:42, September 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 13) ***Sorry, I meant that the reference to it was in AotC. But yes, you are right. I remember getting confused like this when discussing a merge of "nest of gundarks" or something. Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk  16:56, September 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 14) * Nayayen [[Image:Old Republic military symbol.png|18px]] talk 12:59, September 22, 2009 (UTC)
 * 15) A couple notes from Floyd:
 * 16) * "Skywalker and Kenobi fought and defeated a gundark before accidentally releasing noxious gas." Expand on this just a little bit; how did they release the noxious gas?
 * 17) **Fixed.
 * 18) *That's it, nice job.  IFYLOFD  ( You will pay the price for your lack of vision! ) 02:35, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 19) **Thanks for the review, Floyd.  CC7567  (talk) 04:02, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 20) One minor objection: could you give a relative time for the events in the aftermath? Right now it's unclear whether they take place immediately after the skirmish (i.e., the pirates contact Dooku while he's still on Vanqor), or a while later. Good work.  Jonjedigrandmaster  ( Jedi Beacon ) 15:37, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 21) *Fixed; thanks for the review.  CC7567  (talk) 20:26, December 24, 2009 (UTC)
 * 22) Eyrezer:
 * 23) * I find the start of this article quite confusing. Is any information available on the location of this icefield? Is it on a planet or in space? Could you start "The operation" by saying that Tano dropped him off there? Otherwise, it seems to begin quite abruptly.
 * 24) **No info on the ice field beyond what's already in the article. Also, the reason it begins abruptly is because Skywalker and his ships basically just pop out of nowhere into the ice field; one panel he's not there, and the next he is. It isn't really clarified how he gets there.
 * 25) *"While Skywalker's Padawan, Jedi Commander Ahsoka Tano, returned with the Twilight to the cruiser" This cruiser appears out of nowhere. --Eyrezer 00:43, December 27, 2009 (UTC)
 * 26) **That it does; no more info on that in the comic either, sorry. (The comic writers should really hear your objections, though. :P)  CC7567  (talk) 00:51, December 27, 2009 (UTC)

Comments
 * The gundark as a civilian casualty drew a chuckle, but I guess it's accurate. -- —Harrar  ( Cut the comm chatter ) 14:55, September 13, 2009 (UTC)