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ComplimentsEdit

Just thought I'd tell you that I think is is FA quality for sure. Is it finished?:) The General 15:19, 10 June 2009 (UTC)

Suggestion Edit

I think this is an excellent article, but I have one suggestion. You ought to replace the picture of the apprentice looking up at the falling Star Destroyer with the graphic novel image of Kota howling into his comlink, because at least that one is an actual picture of Kota.Jensaarai 04:04, 22 July 2009 (UTC)

  • You should also split the "Gathering Allies" section into multiple sections, just to make sure its not so overwhelmingly huge. Jensaarai 04:39, September 14, 2009 (UTC)

General Concept Art Edit

Found a larger version your recently uploaded Kota Concept art. The proportions are very different, though. You may feel that the cropped version looks better in-article. If so, please revert. SinisterSamurai 03:33, January 20, 2010 (UTC)

Toprawa's notes Edit

As I go through this, I'll leave reviewing notes here.

  • I felt it was important to give a little context for the Corellian Treaty in the intro, but it ended up reading exactly the same as how you describe the Declaration of Rebellion. So I don't know if you want to change something around or not, up to you: "During the subsequent meeting of the Corellian Treaty to formally create the Rebellion against the Empire" and "Kota joined in the official declaration of the group's intentions to rebel against the Empire" Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:46, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
    • I changed the second sentence slightly, hopefully changing the structure enough to not sound repetitive.
  • I'm to understand that TFU Ultimate Sith Edition is all non-canon, yet you include information from it in the biography here. AFAIK, this should instead be organized into a "Non-canon biography" section in the BTS. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:39, January 20, 2010 (UTC)
    • Though I'm told by Tranner that apparently this comes from a downloadable level that is actually canon? If so, I think it would be best if you specify this in the specific reference note and leave a {{C| note next to the Appearances item for clarification. And possibly there's also a SW.com article to reference? May need to speak with Tranner. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:29, January 21, 2010 (UTC)
      • I just checked SW.com; the articles I was thinking of don't contain anything valuable. Grand Moff Tranner 20px (Comlink) 00:36, January 21, 2010 (UTC)
        • Yes, the level in question was first released as downloadable content for the game, and the level takes place at some point in the storyline, after Marek has received his vision. It's included in the Ultimate Sith Edition, but unlike the Tatooine and Hoth levels, there is nothing to suggest that it isn't part of the "proper" storyline. I've added a comment to the appearances section, and a small explanation to the ref tag, though.
  • This belongs in the P/A, rather than the P/T: "Kota was also able to use the Force to snatch both the apprentice's and the Emperor's lightsabers from them."
    • Moved.
  • Please expand on this a little bit: "and had received at least one vision of the future."
    • Expanded on.
  • I feel like the revelation of Marek entering his family's old hut on Kashyyyk isn't explained enough in the biography. It's never really revealed anywhere in the bio the significance of what the hut was, or that (IIRC) they held the Declaration of Rebellion meeting within the old Marek hut. The article only explains this briefly in passing in the P/T. I'd like to see this explained better somewhere around here: ". He was the son of two Jedi and had been born and raised on Kashyyyk until Vader had kidnapped him as a boy after slaying his father, Kento Marek.[2] At a later meeting—which included Organa, his daughter, Bel Iblis, Mon Mothma, Eclipse, and Kota—the Alliance to Restore the Republic was officially born, taking the Marek family crest as its own symbol."
    • Expanded on a little. This is one of those tricky instances where I had to balance the needs of the article against going too far off track with Kota's story and descending into Marek's. Hopefully, I've achieved some sort of balance.
  • Fantastic freakin BTS. More people should take notes from you. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:13, January 21, 2010 (UTC)
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