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15th Deep Core Reserve Fleet[]
- Nominated by: --Vitus InfinitusTalk 00:04, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(3 ECs/2 Users/5 Total)
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Support[]
- Commander Code-8 Hello There! 00:13, 8 March 2021 (UTC)
- OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 22:04, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
- JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 05:34, 5 April 2021 (UTC)
- Imperators II(Talk) 08:15, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:14, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
Object[]
CC-8[]
Should include the timeframe of the Empire's reign- Done --Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:39, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
Needs to refer to Empress Teta as a planet.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:12, 7 March 2021 (UTC)- Added --Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:39, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
Imp[]
"Due to the strategic position of the resources and its position as a gateway to the Deep Core of the galaxy, the planet Empress Teta became an important stronghold for the Empire." — what resources? Honestly, I believe this sentence could use a rewrite for clarity.- It doesn't specify what resources, regardless, sentence has been rewritten for better clarity.
- On the contrary, now that sentence doesn't even have an independent clause in it. Imperators II(Talk) 22:57, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
- Forgot to leave something last night, but I think I fixed it. How does that read?
Erebus Chronus (talk)
14:54, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
- Forgot to leave something last night, but I think I fixed it. How does that read?
- On the contrary, now that sentence doesn't even have an independent clause in it. Imperators II(Talk) 22:57, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
- It doesn't specify what resources, regardless, sentence has been rewritten for better clarity.
Just want to confirm this: "Despite this, the fleet's duties extended to serving as a vital checkpoint along the only known hyperspace route between the Empress Teta system and beyond." — does the source actually says the fleet served as a checkpoint along a hyperspace route? Definitely weird word choice here.Imperators II(Talk) 19:11, 1 April 2021 (UTC)- No, it says that the fleet's duties extended to operating a checkpoint. Fixed it to a more accurate wording.
Erebus Chronus (talk)
22:45, 1 April 2021 (UTC)
- No, it says that the fleet's duties extended to operating a checkpoint. Fixed it to a more accurate wording.
Correct me if I'm wrong, but it seems to me that Nexus of Power is set during Palpatine's rule, in which case the dating should be revised.Imperators II(Talk) 21:59, 2 April 2021 (UTC)- Fixed date. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:48, 4 April 2021 (UTC)
- Doesn't Galactic Atlas also establish that Palpatine died at Endor? If so, you could simply date the date range straight to that book.
- Fixed. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:54, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
- Doesn't Galactic Atlas also establish that Palpatine died at Endor? If so, you could simply date the date range straight to that book.
- Fixed date. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:48, 4 April 2021 (UTC)
The first sentence now needs cleanup, and I'd pipelink "Galactic Emperor" to "Emperor" to avoid the redundancy.Imperators II(Talk) 08:09, 4 April 2021 (UTC)- Fixed --Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:54, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
Comments[]
- Please remember that subjects with only a single source/appearances should not include the word "first" in "first mentioned/appeared" in the behind the scenes section. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 22:04, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you! I'll do my best to keep that in mind. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:35, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- I am taking a temporary personal leave from the site for the sake of my personal health and happiness, and I expect to return anywhere from one week to several weeks. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 14:41, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
- Just a heads up, I will be handling any further objections for this nomination.
Erebus Chronus (talk)
18:08, 1 April 2021 (UTC) - Huge appreciation for Erebus for taking care of things while I was absent. I'm ready for more objections. :P --Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:52, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 09:15, 7 April 2021 (UTC)