You kind of jump information with the last two sentences. The first says that the Malevolence destroyed much of the Fourth Fleet and later ambushed Plo Koon's fleet, and in the second, you go right to saying it was destroyed at the Battle of the Kaliida Nebula. I would fix that and provide a little more information on the Malevolence Campaign.
You should vary the way each sentence starts, since you currently start each with "The..."
Not sure how else to start it when it's "The Republic Fourth Fleet," "The Malevolence," etc. Please let me know if you have any suggestions! --Vitus InfinitusTalk 03:13, 11 November 2021 (UTC)
You could start the last sentence of the first paragraph with "However" instead. Another thing, the Malevolence didn't really ambush Plo Koon's fleet in the episode, since they tracked it to the Abregado system, but were unable to destroy it. I could also copy-edit it if you make the changes and let you know if you like my changes. Erebus Chronus(Talk) 19:04, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
Yeah I think that'll be better! I'll go over the changes after you've made your adjustments --Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:12, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
Yeah your edit works. I've also removed the unnecessary info as per Macaroni --Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:48, 19 November 2021 (UTC)