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Yavin Code[]
- Nominated by: DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:13, 31 December 2020 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: First the Convention, now the Code. Not directly Dwartii-related, but still from the same time period.
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Support[]
- Objection handled on discord. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 20:02, 31 December 2020 (UTC)
- ImpacticForce (Talk) 20:04, 31 December 2020 (UTC)
- VergenceScatter (talk) 04:49, 17 January 2021 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:40, 5 February 2021 (UTC)
- Imperators II(Talk) 22:15, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
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Fan[]
Same as Yavin Convention re: Yavin Prime name.Fan26 (Talk) 15:52, 10 January 2021 (UTC)- Noted. DwartiiDelver (talk) 20:44, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
- Please identify it as being in the Outer Rim. Fan26 (talk) 15:03, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
- Done. DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:24, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
- Same as Yavin Convention, I've removed the location.
- Done. DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:24, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
- Please identify it as being in the Outer Rim. Fan26 (talk) 15:03, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
- Noted. DwartiiDelver (talk) 20:44, 10 January 2021 (UTC)
Can Ultimate Star Wars also be used to cite Yavin Prime's name? It'd be nice to not have so many refs right in one sentence.Fan26 (talk) 18:34, 11 January 2021 (UTC)- Unfortunately, USW never identifies it as "Yavin Prime." DwartiiDelver (talk) 18:43, 11 January 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat[]
"Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi was known to cite the Yavin Code,..." Known by whom? Please avoid such wording if it's not used in the source.UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:40, 15 January 2021 (UTC)- Known to by Anakin, who says "Let me guess, citing the Yavin Code again?" Should I add "according to Anakin Skywalker" before that? DwartiiDelver (talk) 19:50, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
- Yes, that would be helpful. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:57, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
- Added. DwartiiDelver (talk) 20:08, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
- Yes, that would be helpful. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:57, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
- Known to by Anakin, who says "Let me guess, citing the Yavin Code again?" Should I add "according to Anakin Skywalker" before that? DwartiiDelver (talk) 19:50, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
A paragraph break would be appreciated, preferably after 19 BBY.UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:20, 5 February 2021 (UTC)- Sure thing—added. DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:01, 5 February 2021 (UTC)
Imp[]
Doesn't Galactic Atlas identify the planet which Yavin 4 orbits as a gas giant and "Yavin"? If so, you should probably reference both to it in order to remove the extra references. If the info in question isn't directly video game-related (such as this case), referencing it to a reference book is also somewhat better than to a video game. It's also fine if the reference book doesn't use the full name "Yavin Prime", just "Yavin" would be sufficient.- It does identify it as both, yes. I've updated the page accordingly, though I do have just one question about your copy edit: Is it necessary to add "planet" in after gas giant, considering all gas giants are planets? Not sure if stating both would be just slightly redundant, but if you feel otherwise I can leave "planet" in there.
- I don't think there's really a problem with that; I routinely use "gas giant–type planet" on my own articles. Imperators II(Talk) 22:15, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
- It does identify it as both, yes. I've updated the page accordingly, though I do have just one question about your copy edit: Is it necessary to add "planet" in after gas giant, considering all gas giants are planets? Not sure if stating both would be just slightly redundant, but if you feel otherwise I can leave "planet" in there.
Please group semantic sentences in the same paragraphs. Right now, you're somewhat awkwardly splitting the Utapau stuff right in the middle by the paragraph break. Probably the best way to go here is to first state what the Yavin Code is, followed by it sharing its name with something else, and then you can note the stuff about Skywalker and Kenobi and the mission to Utapau — with the latter ideally in a separate paragraph.Imperators II(Talk) 07:41, 7 February 2021 (UTC)- Moved things around a little. Do you think it looks all right with the paragraphs being so noticeably different in length from one another, or should I somehow tweak it further? DwartiiDelver (talk) 17:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
- It's fine now. I think that in this case semantics outweigh the aesthetics. Imperators II(Talk) 22:15, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
- Moved things around a little. Do you think it looks all right with the paragraphs being so noticeably different in length from one another, or should I somehow tweak it further? DwartiiDelver (talk) 17:27, 7 February 2021 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 22:15, 8 February 2021 (UTC)