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Revan

• Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 04:24, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: hehehehehehehehe. Hi there. Did ya miss me?
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:TOR, WP:KOTOR

(1 Inqs/4 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. D MCCG (chat) 03:06, 18 June 2021 (UTC)
2. OtterSurf (talk) 10:03, 28 June 2021 (UTC)
3. It'd be great for Legends Revan to return to FA status. —Tomotron ^{(Star Forge)} 06:52, 7 July 2021 (UTC)
4. The man, the myth, the legend... Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 18:02, 30 November 2021 (UTC)

   -A Girl Has No Name 21:21, 15 December 2021 (UTC) (Vote struck per policy: General rules, item 3 -- DarthRuiz30 (talk) 22:01, 15 December 2021 (UTC))

5. Editoronthewiki (talk) 05:21, 18 January 2022 (UTC)

Object

Tomotron

• Revan Mythologies, Czerka representative, Wookiee warrior and receptionist are redlinks. —Tomotron ^{(Star Forge)} 14:48, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
• Please check that all appearances and sources linked to a BBY date use the system, otherwise the dates will need a note. —Tomotron ^{(Star Forge)} 14:48, 12 June 2021 (UTC)

Vergence

• Ahto City cantina is also a redlink. VergenceScatter (talk) 04:52, 12 June 2021 (UTC)

Up to Rise of the Sith

• "According to Mical, Revan returned to his first teacher in order to learn how to best leave the Jedi Order, though he did not follow through." You're trying to keep a trend of saying Revan is not named Revan yet, but this seems to be an anomaly.
  • Fixed.
• "Outraged at the Jedi Council's refusal to involve the Order in the conflict, the young Jedi Knight began to move among the Order," What do you mean by "move among the order"?
  • Reworded.
• Second and forth paragraphs of The Revanchist are too bloated. As is the forth paragraph of Fighting the Mandalorians and the final paragraph of Dark Lord of the Sith. Bisecting them accordingly is advised.
  • Done.
    • You didn't do the final one I mentioned :P Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 23:03, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
      • Blah I was asleep. lol.
• "Alec and his followers" is used multiple times, but that format makes it sound like they could be Alec's followers.
  • Reworded.
• "Shortly after the Adasca affair, the Taris Siege, and the bombardment of Jebble," the last two events are just passingly mentioned with no context and don't seem relevant to the narrative at all. I'd say it's better to not mention them at all.
  • Done.
• "Anointing his new servants as Darth Revan and Darth Malak, the Dark Lords of the Sith, the Emperor sent them back to the Republic as a vanguard to his own invasion, ordering them to make use of the Rakatan Star Forge and to report back when they had crushed the Republic's resistance." The reintroduction of the Star Forge makes it look like the Sith suddenly had it, and then we find out that Revan is locating it after he searched a lil bit. I'd try and say from the start that Revan and Malak needed to locate and obtain the Star Forge.
  • Changed to "find and make use of"
• "the two were taken captive by the native Black Rakata." The Black Rakata's article introduces them as a tribe, but the Revan article introduces them as if they're a species. Please revise.
  • added "tribe"
• "When the Republic officer Saul Karath defected to Revan's forces, Revan eventually promoted Karath to commander of the entire Sith fleet. However, Malak ordered the Admiral to bombard the surface of the planet Telos IV with his flagship Leviathan," Is Karath the admiral? If so you should probably specify their (new?) rank in the first sentence. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 10:24, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Changed to "newly-promoted Admiral". Cade Calrayn 16:17, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
• You refer to the "Emperor" when Revan and Malak encounter the guy but I'm assuming that's Vitiate? If so, I think it would be better to keep using Vitiate's name rather than just the Emperor.
  • At this point in time, the Emperor was literally *only* known as the Emperor; he discarded his older names after leaving Nathema and didn't readopt others until the events of TOR.
• You ok with these changes? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 23:03, 12 June 2021 (UTC)
  • :thumbs-up: Cade Calrayn 17:10, 13 June 2021 (UTC)
• "Revan quickly won a string of military victories, proving himself to a capable military leader," Proving himself to whom?
  • Republic military. Fixed. Cade Calrayn 15:17, 25 June 2021 (UTC)
• "While Revan was a military genius who knew that the Republic's industrial might was the key to victory, […] "Moral shortcuts" became common under Revan and Malak's leadership, and the two Jedi developed a cold and calculating disposition unlike that of a Jedi; they matched the Mandalorians' brutal tactics with tactics just as merciless." If this is someone's point of view, that should be specified, because this feels to me like it flouts WP:NPOV a bit.
  • Cited - it comes from a lot of sources, like Warfare, but specifically the OOU Atlas and NEC.
• You should specify that Foerost is a planet (or whatever the source says it is if the Foerost article is wrong). Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 12:37, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 15:17, 25 June 2021 (UTC)

Soldier of the Republic

• "He also encountered a number of the building's inhabitants, such as the former waitress Dia,[39] who told Revan about how she was hiding out to avoid a bounty set by a man named Holdan after she rejected his advances." Advances being like an attempt at romance? Does the source clarify this?
  • Sexual/romantic, yes; that's what the phrase "rejected his advances" means.
• "Taking their journals, Revan then discovered a sealed door that Vao unlocked with her security spikes. Upon finding Zaalbar within," Found him within what? What was the door to?
  • Zaalbar was behind the door. Clarified.
• The article reads "While exploring the sewers, " and then "Before they headed down into the sewers," when I'm pretty sure they're still in the sewer. Do you mean like "Before they continued exploring the sewers" or am I missing something? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:19, 26 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Ah, that meant to be "Before they headed down into the base." Fixed. Cade Calrayn 18:47, 30 June 2021 (UTC)
• "Since Revan's defeat, Malak had declared himself the new Dark Lord, taken control of the Sith Empire, and kept the Republic on the defensive." I'm assuming this is about the war in the last section, but it'd be good to clarify so to remind the reader of what already exists.
  • The change you made was fine, but I was talking about the kept the Republic on the defensive part. I should have made that more clear. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 15:32, 12 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Done.
• "However, they were barred from entering the Lower City…" This situation is sorta thrown in out of nowhere. You should Introduce the fact that they were trying to reach the Lower City because Shan's pod might be there, and then mention the Sith troopers barring their entry.
• "but the two stayed where they were and decided to intervene when the commander threatened to kill the Aqualish if he failed to cooperate. After the three Sith were killed," I'd clarify that Revan and Onasi killed them by tweaking that last clause there.
• "Revan purchased a pazaak deck from a man named Garouk and used it to defeat a player named Niklos." I feel that context is insufficient here. My recommendation is that the last bit is worded to say he played and defeated Niklos, the unofficial pazaak champion of Taris, at a pazaak game using the purchased card deck or something along those lines. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 21:59, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
  • All done. Cade Calrayn 15:55, 11 July 2021 (UTC)
• I am once again asking you to verify this copy-edit. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 15:32, 12 July 2021 (UTC)

  • thumbsup: Cade Calrayn 18:00, 12 July 2021 (UTC)

Sectioning

• You good with these changes?
• And these? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 11:19, 26 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Both are good. Cade Calrayn 18:47, 30 June 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Investigate/add audiobooks to app section.
  • Still missing one. Make sure that they follow WP:LG#Audiobooks as well. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:39, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
    • Done. Cade Calrayn 15:17, 25 June 2021 (UTC)
• Non-canon appearances get their own subsection per LG. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:00, 16 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Both done. Cade Calrayn 18:23, 17 June 2021 (UTC)
• Context needed for Arden Kae.
  • Done.
• The Revanchist section could use another image
  • There aren't really any images of him from that period in time; I've shifted some images around and changed their size.
• Many sections could use more subsectioning. These include: The Revanchist, Fighting the Mandalorians, To the Lower City and beyond, The sands of Tatooine, Into the Dune Sea, Into the Shadowlands, Legacy, and others as well—I'd suggest using those as examples of ones that are too long. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:05, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Done. Cade Calrayn 17:00, 17 April 2022 (UTC)

Shayanomer

• Is there any new information in this source? Shayanomer (talk) 12:12, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Nope. Just a passing mention of Revan as "the Enclave's most famous student" when talking about Dantooine's Enclave. Cade Calrayn 15:15, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
• Is it possible to get a full headshot for the infobox instead of the current cropped one? Shayanomer (talk) 12:26, 2 October 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• Further subsectioning is needed in the body, especially for sections such as "The hunt for the mask," where there are dozens of paragraphs. Perhaps adding a few more images would help.
  • gah. blasted session expirations, I saved a reply here earlier. I've subsectioned, but quotes will take me a bit.
• The portions of the BTS section before the "Countinuity issues" subsection should be subsectioned as well.
  • I disagree on the need, but done.
• "Revan also appears in a vision to the player character, the Jedi Exile Meetra Surik, in the depths of Korriban's tombs." — I don't see the significance of this explained in the BTS.
  • Removed, as I don't think it shows the actual character model unmasked, just the armored version. Cade Calrayn 14:58, 29 March 2022 (UTC)
• I don't think there's any need to mention the Revan novel in the BTS either. OOM 224 23:50, 12 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Sorry to interject, but I personally would disagree: it's surely notable if a character is the protagonist of an entire novel. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 17:40, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
    • I suppose that's fair, to mention that the character is the protagonist of the novel. I was more so concerned with whether this sentence is really necessary: "[the novel] explains what happened to Revan and the Exile after the events of the two games." On its own, the sentence doesn't really tell the reader much about the character himself. Perhaps the sentence should point out that Revan is the protagonist of the novel before adding what the novel is about? OOM 224 17:54, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Quotes added and protagonist mentioned. Cade Calrayn 01:00, 3 April 2022 (UTC)

Fred strikes back

• The images from "Warrior and Sith" on should be enlarged. MasterFred(talk) 00:36, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • done. Cade Calrayn 01:01, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
    • That should include the Powers and abilities, Equipment, and Bts sections, too.
      • Done. Cade Calrayn 17:00, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
• It gets confusing referring to him as "the future Revan" at the start of the bio. Should probably use different wording. MasterFred(talk) (he/him) 05:10, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Removed. Cade Calrayn 18:23, 1 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Note to self, left off at Mandalorian Wars. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 15:27, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
• Fighting the Mandalorians Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 15:52, 18 September 2021 (UTC)
• Inquisitors: see Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Revan/Legends/Inq. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 17:39, 21 March 2022 (UTC)

Jai Maruk

• Nominated by: ToRsO bOy (talk) 12:25, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
• WookieeProject (optional):

(0 Inqs/2 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 3 Inqvote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 2 user or 1 Inq vote required to pass.)

Support

1. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 09:01, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
2. — Samonic 10:21, 14 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

Shayanomer

• Please address the objections left over from the first nomination. Shayanomer (talk) 12:56, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Do I just copy the remaining objections from the previous nom here, and address them? Or should I address them on the first nom page? Thanks! ToRsO bOy (talk) 13:14, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Just address them directly, and let me know here when you're done. Shayanomer (talk) 13:24, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Fred will have a look when he's free. Shayanomer (talk) 08:05, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
• Since you have stated that the novel does not provide the exact date, you need to write a note for it. The dates are also currently inconsistent between the infobox and body.
  • Edited the year to 19 BBY for both infobox and body. Sourced both to New Essential Chronology. ToRsO bOy (talk) 16:06, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
    • Does it mention Phindar Spaceport? Shayanomer (talk) 16:10, 18 July 2021 (UTC)
      • Yes, TNEC mentioned the spaceport. ToRsO bOy (talk) 08:00, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
        • Now that specific date is infobox-exclusive. To my understanding, we only employ rounded dates now. Shayanomer (talk) 08:05, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
          • Rounded. ToRsO bOy (talk) 15:52, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
• Also per the AC probation page, the audiobook is a simultaneous 1st appearance. Shayanomer (talk) 09:16, 17 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Edited. ToRsO bOy (talk) 16:06, 18 July 2021 (UTC)

Manoof

• Intro mentions Jai was recuperating but no indication he had been injured. There's also no mention of this in the body until you get to the P&T, but is relevant if it affected his fighting ability and was the reason he was on Coruscant during the Apprentice Tournament. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Added injury mention in the intro and body.ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• Can probably fit another two images in the P&T and P&A/BTS respectively. Potentially one of the clone wars and one of Dooku/Telekinesis/Assassin Droids but ultimately up to you. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Added two more photos.ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
    • I made a slight tweak, I should've been more specific around having one image in the P7T section and the other further down. This edit ok (feel free to change the image if there's one that fits better? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 07:26, 26 February 2022 (UTC)
      • The pictures are good with me. Thanks! ToRsO bOy (talk) 06:55, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
• Mission to Vjun - Just with the hard-sound guns, do they require two operators and is sonic projectors a synonym for the weapon? This sentence "Leem managed to battle through the pain in her head and destroy one of the two sonic projectors, which allowed Maruk to concentrate and demolish one of the droids bearing the second hard-sound gun." may need rephrasing to make this clearer. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • I've made changes to the description. Let me know if its clearer now. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• "As his hatred of her slowly fueled his attacks, Maruk fell into a black fury half blinded with hate as he drove her back with his flurry." Can this be rephrased to remove the double use of hate/hatred? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Reworded. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• Intro mentions that Leem made a silent plea, but body does not make this distinction? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Added in the body. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• In P&T, would you be willing to swap the third paragraph (mention of his childhood/teenage years) with the second paragraph (mention of his Clone Wars temperament)? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • That actually does work better. Switched. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• Can you mention the Publisher for the game in the BTS? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Added. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• BTS indicates his forces were also brought to Vjun by Ventress in the encyclopaedia. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Reworded. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
• Just check you're ok with this edit. I fixed some linking issues, but I'd like you to go through and double check your linking, I left at least one canon link and Jedi apprentice linking to the book series but also make sure you're linking as early as you can, whenever you can. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:44, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Thanks. Will do a double check soon and leave another comment. ToRsO bOy (talk) 18:16, 25 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Edit looks fine. I just did another look and added another link.ToRsO bOy (talk) 06:55, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Please go through the entire article and double check your links are correct. I got to the second paragraph and found Jedi Apprentice, an OOU novel series as well as two canon links to Jedi Knight and Padawan Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:50, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
      • I fixed the Jedi Apprentice link and the Jedi Knight. I've removed the links from Padawan since I used it already for Jedi Apprentice, hope that works. ToRsO bOy (talk) 05:31, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
        • Check this edit as there were still a couple more, a canon link and a link to a disambig page. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 09:01, 27 March 2022 (UTC)

Ecks

• I'd say the introduction length is a bit excessive compared to the size of the body; two paragraphs should suffice. See if you can cut down on some unnecessary detail and context (you don't need to give context to Clone Wars etc in the intro really).
  • I've removed what I could from the intro but couldn't get it down to 2 paragraphs. You reckon I can just say Yoda and Maruk had a bet without explaining the terms? ToRsO bOy (talk) 00:05, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Yeah, you could probably cut down on the terms a bit at least. 1358 ^(Talk) 09:01, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Intro reduced. ToRsO bOy (talk) 01:04, 14 May 2022 (UTC)
• Please check your image caption and quote attribution punctuation. The former should have a period when full sentences are used whereas the latter should never have a period. 1358 ^(Talk) 21:26, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Half of the work was done by the bot. Added periods on the photo descriptions. ToRsO bOy (talk) 00:05, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Per the Manual of Style, image captions that constitute full sentences need a full stop, but not otherwise. 1358 ^(Talk) 09:01, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Revised. Googled "full sentences" and I'm still a bit unsure if I left the one photo description right. ToRsO bOy (talk) 01:04, 14 May 2022 (UTC)
        • Almost correct. "Druckenwell, Maruk's homeworld" has no predicate and isn't a full sentence, while "Jai Maruk's only visual depiction was in Star Wars: Battle for the Republic" has one. Fixed these for you. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:18, 20 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Here is an example of how to use {{CSWECite}}. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 13:52, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
  • Thank you! I've added it to the article. ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:19, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
• Objections from previous nomination:

Objections

Master Fred

• "her apparent lack of the Force..." Is that really how the source describes it, or is it more accurately a lack of connection to the Force or Force-sensitivity
  • Edited it to "her weak connection to the the Force". ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:18, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
• No need to mention the CSWE entry and TERC mention in the Bts' first paragraph. We don't restate the Appearances and Sources sections in the prose anymore.
  • Noted and removed. ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:18, 16 July 2021 (UTC)
• How did you determine the proper way to handle the contradictions mentioned in the Bts? This might be worth noting for the reader. MasterFred(talk) 23:46, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
  • I've separated the two contradictions for easier understanding. Not sure if I'm allowed to argue why I believe one source is more believable than the other. ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:18, 16 July 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Please implement {{CSWECite}} in your references. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:34, 25 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Done ToRsO bOy (talk) 14:18, 16 July 2021 (UTC)

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Shayanomer (talk) 14:28, 16 July 2021 (UTC)

Suljo Warde

• Nominated by: VergenceScatter (talk) 01:16, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: First one, let's hope this goes well. Thanks to everyone who's helped me to get to the point that I feel confident enough to do this.
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:FFGAMES

(2 Inqs/3 Users/5 Total)

(Votes required: 1 Inqvote(s) required to reach minimum. Additional 1 user or 1 Inq vote required to pass.)

Support

1. Happy to cast a support vote! Good work :) -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 15:59, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
2. Liverpool92 03:39, 31 December 2021 (UTC)
3. Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 13:40, 2 March 2022 (UTC)
4. Boo Moraband Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:03, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
5. Nice work OOM 224 19:40, 27 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Liverpool92

• "Human" and "Male" or any other use of gender should be lowercase.--Liverpool92 14:47, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
  • "Human" is always capitalized in legends, but I've fixed the "male." VergenceScatter (talk) 19:43, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Fan

• Is "Assassins" meant to be capitalised in the intro? Fan26 (Talk) 14:08, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
  • No, it's not. Fixed. VergenceScatter (talk) 17:03, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
• "Warde, who would later save Marcolf’s life in return, believed that Marcolf, a Force-sensitive, had the potential to join the Jedi Order, so he brought the Mirialan with him to the planet Arbooine—where Warde had been laying the groundwork for a Republic outpost—with plans to eventually bring him to Coruscant[1], the capital of the Republic." This is a run-on, please rectify. Fan26 (Talk) 23:41, 21 September 2021 (UTC)
  • Rectified. VergenceScatter (talk) 01:00, 22 September 2021 (UTC)

CC-8

• Context for Eriadu in the intro
• The Republic seems like it could go in the infobox
• Two of the quotes are missing punctuation
  • Still one to go Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 23:04, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
    • Oops, fixed. VergenceScatter (talk) 23:11, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
• Images generally look better when they're placed below quotes, and doing it that way is more consistent with our other status articles
• The Cato Neimoidia section should have another subsection rather than just one Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:24, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
  • All done. VergenceScatter (talk) 15:50, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
• It would be appropriate to add the years for the Clone Wars on their first mention, given that the article has a time jump
  • Added
• Any chance of linking Warde's actions on Cato Neimoidia to an existing Clone Wars battle, or even creating a new article if the relevant info is mainly about the city?
  • Created a new article
    • This isn't an objection but I've accessed an online copy of the sourcebook and it uses the heading Battle for Jorra, which should be used as a canonical title
• The first sentence of the Encountering the discovers section reads like we should already know that the holocron was discovered, could you adjust the wording there?
  • How's that?
• It's not currently clear how Warde recognized the discoverers until later in that section
  • Should be fixed
• I found a few instances of underlinking throughout the article, might be good to check for anything else Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:08, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Went through, added a few more. Should be good now. VergenceScatter (talk) 00:32, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
• Chandrilan is intro exclusive
  • It's already in the bio.
    • I meant Chandrilan/Legends, not Chandrila
      • It says he's from Chandrila, which is the same as saying he's Chandrilan. I don't think it's intro-exclusive. VergenceScatter (talk) 16:31, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
        • What I'm more concerned about is that Chandrilan isn't linked in the body Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 05:32, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
          • Linked. VergenceScatter (talk) 05:34, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
• Needs mediacat
  • Added
• Gatekeeper is inconsistently capitalized throughout
  • Fixed.
• There's quotes from the first page of Chapter II or III in the sourcebook that would suit the P&T
  • Used the one from Chapter II. I didn't use the Chapter III quote anywhere because it's unclear when he said it.
• It'd be worth specifying that the discoverers had retraced Warde's steps after finding the holocron and learned about him from the people he affected
  • Done
• There's quotes for the optional paths and alternate endings that could go in both of the latter Bts subsections Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:24, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Added VergenceScatter (talk) 17:03, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
    • TIL the Layout Guide technically allows quotes to be used outside of the beginning of a section. Anyway there's still options for the final challenge and meeting section, even if its the ones quoted in that section Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:49, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Added. VergenceScatter (talk) 16:37, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
• Couple more things: Based on the quote in Warde's fall you can specify the names of all the characters mentioned there in the body
• Could you split the second paragraph in Arrival and descent? Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:47, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Both done VergenceScatter (talk) 05:38, 2 May 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• I count three one-paragraph sections. How would you feel about merging some of them? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 14:53, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Hmm, the problem is that doing so would prevent me from including the quotes that are in those sections. Do you think it's worth combining those sections if I have to get rid of the quotes? VergenceScatter (talk) 18:11, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
    • If that's the only reason not to, then absolutely. Quotes are added if sectioning allows, not the other way around. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 18:18, 26 October 2021 (UTC)
      • "Early life" and "Clone Wars" can easily be merged into something like "Early life and Clone Wars."
        • Done. Sorry about the wait, misread the message chain. VergenceScatter (talk) 19:38, 15 November 2021 (UTC)
• We should avoid placing images next to consecutive paragraphs.
  • I'm going to disagree here. I believe all of the image placement on the article is fine. VergenceScatter (talk) 18:33, 8 November 2021 (UTC)
• "Skills and abilities" has a one-sentence paragraph. I think that section can be two paragraphs, but they should be of around equal length.
  • Done;
• Bts needs some more subsectioning. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 18:27, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
  • How's that? VergenceScatter (talk) 18:33, 8 November 2021 (UTC)

ThrawnChiss7

• Under "Personality and traits" there is a red template that says "Template:Trust is a luxury I can no longer afford"ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 01:44, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. VergenceScatter (talk) 03:27, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 14:44, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• There should be an additional subsection under "Early life and Clone Wars"
  • Added
• The word "during" gets repetitive, particularly at the start of the Biography. See if you can cut some out.
  • Replaced a few, how's it looking now?
    • Awesome, looks much better now OOM 224 21:34, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
• Warde's species and gender are repeated between the Biography and the P&T; stating them in either one section is enough. OOM 224 10:00, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Removed VergenceScatter (talk) 20:42, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
• Continuing the review, now that I've read through the article in its entirety…
  • "its gatekeeper, an artificial personality that could guide a future individual to the holocron's components" — there's no real need to state this info here, so how about merging it into the next paragraph, specifically "took comfort in the fact that the gatekeeper would remain to guide the finders of the holocron"?
    • Merged.
  • No quote for the "Arbooine" section? (or Equipment?)
    • I'd thought there weren't any available, but was able to find one for each.
  • "He was never able to understand why he had chosen to come to Moraband, even after years of contemplation, although his ultimate reason for doing so was that he saw that he would die on the planet" — I'm confused with the wording here. Are you trying to give the reason for Warde going to Moraband while also saying that he never understood the same decision?
    • That's how the book presents it. That's the reason in his head but he doesn't realize it. I tried to clarify it a bit, how's that?
      • Made a slight tweak, but otherwise it's good OOM 224 19:40, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
  • "where he kept a datapad full of ranting prophecies — heh, this almost sounds like me :P
  • There's enough space for an image under P&T, but I understand if you don't want to add one.
    • There's space but I don't think there's an image that fits there super well
  • Also, his quip about Moraband's weather is good P&T material.
    • Added
  • For Skills and abilities, I'd like it if you could specify how his power of foresight was different from that of other Jedi, as per the quote in that section. OOM 224 17:17, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Done VergenceScatter (talk) 19:34, 27 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Note that Chronicles uses "Moraband" throughout, so I've elected to use that name in the article instead of "Korriban." VergenceScatter (talk) 22:39, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Unidentified First Order stormtrooper sergeant

• Nominated by: Liverpool92 15:06, 1 September 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: First FAN.
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:GE

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Support

1. YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 15:09, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
2. Nice work VergenceScatter (talk) 05:35, 5 January 2022 (UTC)

Samonic (Talk) 14:13, 15 March 2022 (UTC)

Object

Vergence

• Any way you can add a "Skills and abilities" section? VergenceScatter (talk) 16:15, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. Added as much as i could which wasn't much.--Liverpool92 10:45, 11 September 2021 (UTC)
• Does the comic identify Ki-Adi Mundi as a Cerean? (Or at least picture him?) VergenceScatter (talk) 17:02, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Yes it shows him in a flashback.--Liverpool92 02:33, 5 January 2022 (UTC)
• Is there any available context for Sword of Khashyun? VergenceScatter (talk) 17:19, 4 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Added.--Liverpool92 02:33, 5 January 2022 (UTC)

Yakov, Sergeant Tzvi

• The second intro paragraph has confusing sentence structure. I had trouble parsing the grammar of its second-last sentence.
• You should clarify that "Red Fury" and "709th Legion" are the same.
• Who is Io? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 04:59, 30 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 21:55, 30 October 2021 (UTC)

CC-8

• Quote sourcing needs to be updated
• The bio should start with a sentence that more directly introduces this character, similar to a first sentence in the intro. The context for the First Order could also go here, since its in the intro and not the bio
• There's a few places where the writing is more like narrative prose than an encyclopedic entry, stuff like "First Order assault shuttle roared above the outpost" and "revealing his scared face and his prosthetic left eye."
• Having not read the comic, it seems like there's stuff about the sergeants views on history that could be described in the P&T
• The second and fourth sections of the bio need some brief context to establish the sergeant getting to the locations
• Equipment section goes below skills and abilities
• Mediacat needs to be linked
• Since the StarWars.com article came out before the comic, it needs to have {{1stp}} next to it and get described in the Bts Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:15, 17 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. The fifth objection was a little difficult because it never shows him entering the store.--Liverpool92 02:29, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
• The part about the sergeant revealing his scar and prosthetic eye can be removed, and the fact that he acquired those injuries at some point can be mentioned in the first section Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:14, 1 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:45, 8 May 2022 (UTC)

Sergeant Samonic

• "A human male sergeant served the autocratic military junta, the First Order, as a stormtrooper and military officer of the 709th Legion, also known as the "Red Fury." — Could you change that to "A human male sergeant served the autocratic military junta of the First Order. He served as a stormtrooper and military officer of the junta's 709th Legion, also known as the "Red Fury.""
• "He had a long scar around his left eye, with a blue prosthetic in place of where his eye should be." This is like a very small P+T(Personality and traits) section, which is unnecessary as you have a P+T section below; and in any case, it should be at the end of the intro.
• Could you merge some of the intro's paragraphs? Same thing for the body's "Paying Dok-Ondar a visit." — Samonic 15:27, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:55, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
• "During the conflict with the private military force, the Resistance, the sergeant—whose legion deployed to the planet Batuu at Black Spire Outpost to punish any Resistance activity." — Could you change how you introduce the Resistance to how you introduce the First Order for consistancy? — also, "[…] the sergeant—whose legion…" makes it seem like the legion was a part of the Resistance.
  • Fixed.
• Context for Lieutenant Agnon, Kendoh Gang, Dok Ondar (should be supplied when first mentioned)
  • Context already there for Kendoh Gang and Ondar.
    • A "notorious gang"? I only understand it is a gang with that, which I already knew thanks to its name; please supply further context.
• Can you get a quote for "Skills and abilities/Equipment"? — Samonic 09:41, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
  • There is no quote from him or someone else that describes any skills or abilities.--Liverpool92 02:13, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
    • And Equipment?
      • Same deal.
• Article is missing some links, please go through the article and add links where necessary; you have a duplicate link.— Samonic 17:44, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • This is still an issue.— Samonic 21:10, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Missing context throughout.— Samonic 17:46, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Got it.--Liverpool92 19:52, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Context should be supplied at the first mention and this is still an issue (Example: Basic). — Samonic 21:10, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Can this link to Batuu system? "Above Batuu" — Samonic 20:59, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• " In 34 ABY,[3] at Black Spire Outpost[2] on the Outer Rim[4] planet Batuu,[2] a First Order assault shuttle flying above the outpost" Is this sentence missing something? — Samonic 21:10, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Can you merge the first two subsections? — Samonic 21:10, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Who's Remex Io affiliated with? — Samonic 21:10, 26 May 2022 (UTC)

Erebus

• The intro feels a bit too large in my opinion. Are you able to cut down some bits of extra information from the four paragraphs?
  • Fixed.
• Is there a reason why you're linking to First Order High Command? They're simply the leaders of the First Order military, not the military itself.
  • Because one of the reviewers did a copy edit and added that so I went with it.
• Context for Moraband. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 23:14, 4 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Added.--Liverpool92 02:57, 8 May 2022 (UTC)

XoXaan (Redux review)

• Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 131.
• Date added: October 24, 2021

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Support

1. Shayanomer (talk) 13:52, 4 May 2022 (UTC)
2. OOM 224 13:40, 6 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Shayanomer

• Why isn't there a death date in the infobox? It's not incorrect to provide a range there.
• "More than four thousand years passed, and eventually, XoXaan's wait ended around 17 BBY, Korriban with the arrival of A'Sharad Hett...." This doesn't read right.
• Context for Coruscant, Cade Skywalker, and Had Abbadon.
• The Equipment image is of rather low quality and I would like to see it replaced.
• If the discrepancy regarding her appearance in multiple sources is already documented in-universe, then I believe it is unnecessary to mention it again in the BTS. I also think that illustration should be documented under Biography instead of Equipment.
• BTS can use an image of the comic. Shayanomer (talk) 04:39, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
  • All done, with additional expansions, cleanup, and reorganising. OOM 224 11:42, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
• Please format the Lost Tribe of the Sith comic titles as per the Manual of Style. Shayanomer (talk) 04:09, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Amended OOM 224 07:29, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
• Since the article has undergone a ton of expansions, I'm assuming there's nothing else pending now?
• Can we get some more sectioning for "A newfound empire"? It is 5 paragraphs long currently, I do feel like the Book of Sith and Force ghost stuff can be spun off into its own section. Shayanomer (talk) 13:14, 4 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Good idea. And yes, that's everything. OOM 224 13:44, 4 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• I actually forgot this existed as I kept procrastinating on this article, but any issues that I could find myself should all be sorted with the latest edits. OOM 224 13:53, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

Solha

• Nominated by: Samonic (talk) 19:38, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
• WookieeProject (optional):Novels, Durge's Lance

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Support

1. Such a curiously arrogant figure; an intriguing review.—spookywilloww^talk 23:44, 3 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

Lewis

• There are multiple links missing, e.g. standard month, lightsaber. Everything that can be linked should be linked.
  • This also applies to the introduction as well.
    • On it Samonic (talk) 17:35, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
      • Introduction addressed. Is the objection addressed now? Thank you. Samonic (talk) 10:22, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
• The circumstances of Padme meeting Solha should be expanded.
• You should specify what blaster Solha used.
• Duplicate links should be removed
• Date is intro exlcusive. Lewisr (talk) 19:39, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
  • There is no specification on what blaster he used. The circumstances can't be expanded as there is no more information on the source. There are only dates in the intro. - Samonic (talk) 20:26, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
    • All objections are addressed. I believe so at least. Thank you for your objections. - Samonic (talk) 21:57, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
      • The date needs to be included in the main body as well. Yes there is more information to be added on the circumstances, please actually read it again and you will see. There are still multiple links missing, and they should be linked at the first mention (example: the mining link needs to be moved to the first mention of mining) Lewisr (talk) 22:10, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
        • Alright, I'll address them in some minutes. Thank you! - Samonic (talk) 12:07, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
        • Dates addressed. Thanks. - Samonic (talk) 13:52, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
        • Circumstances addressed too I believe. - Samonic (talk) 13:55, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
          • Date cannot be sourced to the book. Circumstances still not addressed, look at what comes directly after Padme says when she met him once. And the links are still not all there, and again they need to be linked at the first mention (example again being factory) Lewisr (talk) 14:39, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
            • What can I source the date to? - Samonic (talk) 17:52, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
              • Dates addressed. Mining moved, I'll address the circumstances and links as I'm able to. Thanks. - Samonic (talk) 19:52, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
                • Added a bunch more links. Do you think there are yet more to link? Samonic (talk) 14:55, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• You should include Padme's response about what people in the Republic actually thought of him. Lewisr (talk) 17:21, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
  • On it. Samonic (talk) 17:37, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 10:23, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
• What exactly is being sourced to the Star Wars Encyclopedia issue? Does it say the whole paragraph? Lewisr (talk) 17:21, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
  • What paragraph? The one in "Early life"? It's sourcing that he joined Dooku's rising faction on Serenno. Samonic (talk) 17:37, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 10:23, 12 January 2022 (UTC)

Erebus

• Welcome to the FAN. There are a few things I've noticed so far:
  • Missing Category:Galactic Republic defectors
  • No need to mention that Thrawn: Alliances was a canon novel since there is no Legends counterpart for Solha. Also, please state what installment of the Thrawn series the novel was.
  • Does the novel or Encyclopedia issue in fact state that his Serennian cloak was "distinctive"?
  • I'm assuming that the image of the B2 is supposed to illustrate the cortosis super battle droids?
  • The novel does not state that Coruscant was a planet. Please source from "capital planet of the Republic" to Star Wars: Galactic Atlas, since it does, and then put the Alliances reference after the comma at Coruscant. So "...Coruscant,[1] the capital planet of the Republic.[2]" Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 20:54, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Thank you, no it doesn't state that it was distinctive, I'm removing that now. Yes, the image is supposed to illustrate the Cortosis Super Battle droids. I'll source it now. Thank you for your objections! - Samonic (talk) 22:01, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
      • All objections addressed. - Samonic (talk) 22:05, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
        • Could you provide in the caption that Solha oversaw the cortosis SBDs construction or something similar, then, please?
          • Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 08:15, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Please use {{EncyclopediaCite}} when referencing Encyclopedia issues. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 22:17, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 9:08, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• In the intro, there is a grammatical error in the sentence surrounding the factory's purpose for Order 66 by Sidious. Could you please amend that?
  • I believe I have, thank you. - Samonic (talk) 9:03, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• There are still signs of present tense in the article. Please change it to past tense as I've previously pointed out.
  • I'll look into it. Thank you. - Samonic (talk) 9:11, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
    • There are still some in "Raid on the factory."
      • I think they are now finally addressed! Samonic (talk) 20:36, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Please provide context for the Clone Wars, i.e. its combatants.
  • Added its combatants. Thank you. - Samonic (talk) 9:09, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• You should state that Sidious was publicly known as the Chancellor. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 22:41, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 8:19, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Please merge the second and third paragraphs in "Capture of Thrawn and Skywalker," they are small enough to be one paragraph.
  • Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 19:55, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Is "Service level" capitalized in the book?
  • No. Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 19:55, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Battle droid and "droid" should not be capitalized.
  • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 20:27, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Can we get some variety in identifying Thrawn, Solha, Anakin and Amidala? Instead of saying their names every time they are mentioned, you could vary it by saying their titles, Jedi Knight, Senator, Duke, or the Serennian and the Chiss. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 16:51, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed. Thanks. Samonic (talk) 08:47, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• I'm noticing various grammatical errors, such as misuse or no use of commas, abscences of full-stops until line 6 in the first paragraph of "Capture of Thrawn and Skywalker"
  • I think I fixed the commas and full stops in "Capture of Thrawn and Sywalker." Is there anything else to address? Samonic (talk) 20:38, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • I'll just make a copy-edit.
• We try to avoid using "this" in in-universe sections.
  • Fixed. Samonic (talk) 19:33, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• You are still capitalizing things that shouldn't be.
  • Addressed. At least the ones we discussed on discord. Samonic (talk) 20:28, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• "They entered the main building, the door to the courtyard closed and the lights came back on." - This sentence doesn't seem relevant to me. You can either remove it or reword it because it's still play-by-play like we've discussed.
  • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 20:28, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • I find it even more irrelevant, now.
      • Addressed. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 08:30, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
• "When Count Dooku received vital information from an unknown species. The information explained of a rare metal, cortosis that could resist lightsabers. Dooku, who was pleased, made contact with his master, Darth Sidious, who was publicly known as the Supreme Chancellor of the Republic and told him of this discovery." - You should change this sentence to mention "During the war, the Separatist leader, Count Dooku, had discovered the existence of a metal known as cortosis, which was capable of resisting lightsaber strikes. As a result, he contacted his master, the Dark Lord of the Sith, Darth Sidious, who was publicly known as Supreme Chancellor Sheev Palpatine of the Republic, and explained the discovery. In Sidious's desire to utilize the cortosis for future purposes, such as his plot to destroy the Jedi Order, Dooku dispatched Duke Solha alongside his siblings to the planet Mokivj to oversee the mining operations in 19 BBY," or something similar to that. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 18:47, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed.
    • You copied my example verbatim. Please reword it to your own.
      • Done. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 08:21, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
• The link on "coordinates" is irrelevant to the subject, since it's not a galactic coordinate. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 18:59, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 08:30, 13 January 2022 (UTC)

Dionne

• The last sentence of the intro sounds a bit speculative. It is a likely scenario, but I can't recall the novel making any statements about Solha's final destiny.
  • No it didn't make any. I get I should remove it. - Samonic (talk) 20:04, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• "in that time, in that time" repeat in the Early life section.
  • Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 20:09, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Better, but in fact I think you could cut the first "in that time" out completely.
      • Now, addressed. Samonic (talk) 08:49, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• "Padmé eventually … Padmé eventually" repeat in the second paragraph of the Dispatched to Mokivj section.
  • Addressed. - Samonic (talk) 20:09, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• There is some incorrect information in the sentence: "Duja's ship and that they came to Mokijv because there was a preset hyperspace course on Duja's ship, the Possibility". It was Padmé who used the Possibility to fly to Mokivj and her arrival there was due to the message Duja had recorded before her death. The ship Thrawn and Skywalker were using was called Larkrer or something, and it had "a Techno Union feel to it", and the stuff they spun about preset coordinates was just smoke and mirrors.
  • You're right. Addressing it when I'm able to. Thank you. Samonic (talk) 20:41, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 09:59, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• "This devastating defeat devastated Solha's career." This sentence is both speculative and repetitive.
  • Addressed.- Samonic (talk) 20:04, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• LebJau, Cimy and Huga also speak about how Solha and his siblings treated the workers, it might go into the Personality and traits section. The workers were not given enough food and sometimes their work was just too hard to them and some of them died.
  • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 08:55, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• Just my two cents.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 19:26, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
• Sorry, I have couple of new ones, too.
  • No need to apologize, the more objections the better the article gets! Samonic (talk) 08:55, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• Not a fan of the quote you added for Dispatched to Mokivj. It doesn't really tell anything about Solha. Maybe a quote from LebJau/Huga/Cimy that talks about the changes Solha made to the factory early on?
  • Sure. I'll look for one. Thank you. Samonic (talk) 08:15, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 10:05, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
      • Yes, that one is much better.
• This bit also needs to be corrected: "calling Skywalker a thief, the Serennian aimed at Skywalker from the corridor in front of his cell with his blaster, and said that R2 wanted to be here and that he got here thanks to Skywalker, and for that alone he should be shot," Maybe make it clear Solha didn't at that point know that Skywalker was Skywalker. And that Solha thought there was a Jedi on the loose in the factory, and that the Jedi had wanted to come there, not R2.
  • First, yes, that will be addressed. On the other hand, looking into it but I'm pretty sure it's R2. Samonic (talk) 08:55, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • It is definitely not R2 they are referring to, but to the imaginary Jedi. On page 174 (hard cover novel) Anakin expressed fear about "him" coming after them because they kicked "him" of the ship. Why would anyone be scared of an R2 unit coming after them? So the "he" Anakin and Solha are speaking is the vanishing Jedi.
      • Yep, now I understand. Though page 174 leads me to Imperial era. Will take a bit more time. Samonic (talk) 18:12, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
        • I addded that it was the Jedi. Addressed I believe. Samonic (talk) 19:01, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
          • Different book editions are a pain, when trying to be helpful and provide page numbers. Because they can lead into somewhere completely irrelevant, as in this case apparently.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 18:49, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
• "by his Uncle Skywalker" should propably be "by her 'Uncle Anakin'". Padmé never used "Uncle Skywalker".
  • Hmm, I thought it was Skywalker. I'll look into it. Samonic (talk) 08:17, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 08:23, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• The quote/conversation at the beginning of the Dealing with Skywalker has text missing. The whole quote reads: "Captain Boroklif is, let's say, indisposed. / I need to speak to him. / Captain Boroklif isn't here. There was trouble at Black Spire. Boroklif and his crew weren't in any condition to fly. Do I have to draw you a picture. / Are you saying they're dead? All of them?". I was under impression modifying quotes is not encouraged on Wookieepedia.
  • Sorry, I must have missed that. Addressing it now in a single edit. Samonic (talk) 18:01, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Addressed. Samonic (talk) 18:18, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• Is Solha's comm worth mentioning in the equipment section? Also there is a bit of detail where Padmé first sees Solha about the cloak: throat clasps, color and ribbing, that could help to beef out the text a little.
  • It is worth it. Addressing it when I find the page on my book.Samonic (talk) 18:18, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • There is not much detail, there's just this, I might have misunderstood. I'm adding it though. Thank you! "That wasn’t just a cloak. The style, the throat clasps, the color and ribbing—all of it identified it as a royal Serennian cloak." Samonic (talk) 18:30, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
• Also you might want to add a little more detail about how Padmé defeated Solha by using the grappling hook to knock him out.
  • Addressed.
  • Thanks for your most recent objections, this are really useful. Addressing all of them. Samonic (talk) 18:01, 11 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Indeed you have.
• I think there is still some details Cimy, Huga and LebJau tell Padmé about Solha that can be cleaned from the dialogue, but I'll take a quick look to find more specific pointers of what I have in mind.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 18:49, 12 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Thank you. I'll also look for them as I believe the P+T section needs some more content. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 19:53, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
  • I think I've extracted pretty much all information from the dialogue, there isn't much else. Is that what you wanted me to add? Or is there anything else? Thank you. *Samonic (talk) 13:41, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
    • There are still couple of minor things that could be made more prominent. For example, LebJau points out that the factory as a building was in existence before the Separatists showed up and changed it for their own purposes. It could also be added to "Dispatched to Mokivj" section how secretive Solha and the other leaders were about what was being build there, how they covered everything up before lower level local workers were allowed in for maintenance.
    • It might also be worth noting that Solha himself acting as a traffic controller is a bit peculiar. When they are escorted in, Anakin doesn't take him initially that seriously, believing he is someone expendable, because he's "the flunky who vectored them in" (i.e. the traffic controller).--Dionne Jinn (talk) 18:15, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
      • I added all that, I believe this objection is finally addressed. *Samonic (talk) 20:27, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
• The article currently says: "Amidala then went missing for months". What is the source for months? In the novel, when Thrawn and Anakin study the grass growth pattern outside Padmé's ship, Thrawn estimates the Possibility departed there about a week before their arrival. That seems to me that she was gone only a couple of weeks, max.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 19:23, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 19:52, 13 January 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Can we add a skills and abilities section? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 18:36, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
  • There's not much in his skills or abilities in Thrawn: Alliances, I could add it but it would probably be almost empty. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 12:22, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Added one with the information available on the source. Addressed. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 13:08, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
• I'm seeing an uncountably large number of commas being misused. Please go through the article to make sure that you fix all of the ones in wrong places as well as any run-on sentences. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 00:48, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Please let me know if at least some portion of it has been fixed. I'll continue to fix it as I'm able to. Samonic (Talk) 11:28, 19 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Something to be extremely aware of in the future. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 06:57, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Indeed.— Samonic (Talk) 10:27, 26 March 2022 (UTC)

Luca

• There is definitely room for a few more images.
  • Added two. The ones we discussed. Thanks. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 18:27, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
• The "A" shouldn't be capitalized in "Skills and abilities"
  • Addressed.
• "Born and native" is redundant.
• "It was until, when he had an encounter with Duja, former handmaiden of Amidala." Is this sentence missing something?
  • Don't think so. I'm checking it just in case though. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 18:27, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
    • I mean, it doesn't really make sense grammatically. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:31, 19 January 2022 (UTC)
      • Addressed. *Samonic (talk) 13:53, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
• Article should specify that Thrawn is the core name.
  • Addressed.
• It isn't clear why Anakin contacted Solha, since they were affiliated with opposing powers.
• (Reviewing note) I'll continue reviewing the article when I get the chance. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 17:58, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
  • All objections are addressed. Thank you. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 19:12, 16 January 2022 (UTC)

spookly

• The intro seems to have a differing order of events than the History, in that it mentions the work he did for Dooku on Mokivj in the first paragraph before content in the second intro paragraph, making it seem like he served the Separatists before the Republic. Some of the mentions of his defection/work otherwise seem to be said twice as well.
• The latter half of the second paragraph in the "Dispatched to Mokivj" seems like it could be condensed slightly, as there's several sentences about book events not directly relevant to Solha (in which: is there a particular reason Anakin's referred to by first name only here?).
• "Solha knew that there was a Jedi loose in the factory, however, he didn't know who Skywalker was, he then sent Thrawn and Skywalker to some improvised prison cells." Maybe split?
• It seems like the "Raid on the factory" section could additionally be looked at for removing some detail. Some of the conversation dialogue between other novel characters and events have little to do with Solha himself. There's also some phrases that aren't quite sentences in there, like "And she offered him to surrender in good terms.", as well as some run-ons.
  • I'm still seeing quite a bit of it, in particular:
  • "Amidala attempted to keep the Chiss in the factory, but her attempt was in vain."
  • "Their meeting also coincided with the Chiss Ascendancy's raid on the factory, retrieving the shield generator."
  • "Skywalker then left the room and began his search for the senator once again."
  • "In the meantime, Amidala evacuated the workers with LebJau before the factory was destroyed, Thrawn joined the senator and the Jedi Knight who revealed that the ore was cortosis and that it deflected blaster bolts and disabled lightsabers, thanks to its large energy absorption rate. They learned that the ore was mined in the river next to the factory and strengthened the battle droids' armor making them invulnerable, something that could change the Clone Wars forever. Thrawn then agreed to destroy the factory after the Chiss retrieved the shield generator." - can really be summarized in one sentence, that ties Solha to it.
  • "Amidala encountered the duke, who..." this paragraph details their dialogue to the point where "then" is used five times in the same section, and "told" is used a lot of times too.
  • "Amidala asked him if he thought..." - this paragraph, same issue as bullet above.
  • "And added that it was unfortunate that he would perish on Mokivj." "And that thanks to that, everyone would remember him." - still the half sentences, here.
  • "Resulting in the explosive force doing more than merely collapsing the mine's tunnels." another, from Defeat.—spookywilloww^talk 04:09, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
• The second image in the above section also seems really small on my screen, would you be against making it a bit larger?
• In "Defeat", the image caption should specify that Coruscant is what's pictured.
• Some P&T tweaking might be nice, in that it seems to mention his reaction to a lot of varying specific dialogue pieces, which seems unnecessary. Examples of are the sentences like "Solha was told this, he reacted with this", somewhat more like the History is phrased. Some of his skills/innovativeness in development might be better suited to skills section.
• Is the punctuation at the end of some of the quote captions necessary? Some precdent for similar seems to not have. There's also one quote out of the many on the article that refers to Skywalker only by his last name, rather than both, like the rest. It might be nice to make them consistent.
• Can it be established that he had joined the CIS at least by or past a certain year (likely 24 BBY given the date ref on the CIS page), given the Separatists' founding can be dated, so he must've joined past it existing?
• Context for Batuu and Black Spire in history.—spookywilloww^talk 20:07, 11 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Everything addressed, everything addressed but the first and the sixth objections, which are being worked on—the sixth one has been a problem for a while, actually. Thank you. Samonic (Talk) 10:39, 12 March 2022 (UTC)
• Technically it's never said that Solha’s siblings were assigned to the planet at the same time he was, just that they were working for him there by the point Amidala arrived. (Biography)
  • "the count dispatched Solha and his siblings to the planet Mokivj to oversee the mining operations[1] around 19 BBY.[4]" it's still here.—spookywilloww^talk 06:07, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
• "During the war, the Separatist leader Dooku ..." - the article expands upon the count contacting Sidious, and that Dooku’d discovered the cortosis. In the Grysk scene, Thrawn theorizes that maybe they contacted Dooku about it, but there’s no way for him to confirm that, and Vader knows more than he does. It’s not said to have actually happened, but instead pivots to Vader’s reflection on the reality. The mention of the contacting and discovering does not seem to have basis, and since not confirmable, is irrelevant to Solha. Refer to our Discord conversation to see where this was brought up if unclear.
  • "In Darth Sidious's—Dooku's master desire to use the cortosis for various future purposes, such as his plot to destroy the Jedi Order, the count dispatched Solha and his siblings to the planet Mokivj to oversee the mining operations[1] around 19 BBY.[4]" To this point, I would reccomend re-reading Vader's scene, and perhaps reflecting on what Solha's intro has, which matches. The place produced the armor, which was intended by Sidious for his plans, but the way it's worded here ties it in with Dooku, as if he had a part in it or knew about it. From what the text says, that can't really be established, rather, it's two discordant events and theories of Thrawn that should be presented as such.—spookywilloww^talk 06:07, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
• It would be nice to see some variation in image caption wording as two images both use "teamed up", in reference to the same characters more or less.
• In the "Raid on the factory" section, would you consider adding a quote from Solha and Amidala's encounter? There's quite some good content there. If not, the current quote's explanation, as it's only attributing who says it, seems to have little relevance to Solha as it doesn't mention him or occur in a scene where he is present, without adding something.
• Just one example tonote, but it would be good to go through for flow, running into a lot of "they left the factory and then destroyed the factory. " type of repetitiveness.
• Pretty sure what is included as a quote in Equipment can't actually be added as a quote because it's her thoughts and she isn't saying it.
• The P&T doesn't need to specify that he hails from Serenno, the biography does that. Additionally, it should be fairly easy to establish Serenno as in the Outer Rim much earlier in the article, rather than way down there.
• Solha's noted to have an identifiable Serennian accent, that can be noted.
• Please be mindful of the proper formatting for images, which should include underscores for spaces when calling to Files.—spookywilloww^talk 04:09, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • I believe I've fixed everything. Thank you.— Samonic (Talk) 08:58, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
• Please double-check your quotes punctuation and styling. Several do not match what the book has.
• The P&T does not need to double state his hailing; it's already in the body.
• Circling back to the "Raid on the factory" section in a fresh section for comments, though stemming off what I've said above (I'll expand to specifics, given it's not fixed):
  • The first paragraph has very slim relevance to Solha, if only at the start, and then the rest doesn't relate to his mentions at all. He's not mentioned in it, and it can basically be shortened to the equivalent of "Eventually, Thrawn and Skywalker used a crafted cord to escape from the cells Solha had imprisoned the pair in."
  • The second paragraph's start runs into the same issue.
    • Parts such as "The Jedi was scared of her going alone with the Chiss however, he ultimately accepted it." - Skywalker's fear for her, is not necessary to document here.
    • "which involved Thrawn and the senator going alone to the roof to retrieve the lightsaber." can be trimmed off.
    • same with "Skywalker then left the room and began his search for the senator once again."
  • Third paragraph:
    • "they also witnessed some spheres which descended onto the factory, which were part of a Chiss mission to retrieve a deflector shield generator from the factory." is not relevant to Solha himself
    • "Until he met with his wife who gave him his lightsaber and told him that Thrawn had abandoned them." - half sentence.
    • "Skywalker fought several B2s and discovered that their armor disabled lightsabers and deflected blaster bolts. However, he used the Force and disabled them." - also not relevant.
    • In keeping the most important parts of these three paragraphs, then, ideally should be left with about one paragraph of a neat length mentioning their escape from Solha's cell, cutting to his reacquisition of his lightsaber from Amidala and Thrawn's efforts, keeping the bit about the cortosis droids encounter, and finishing with Skywalker's brief B2s fight.
  • The 4th paragraph doesn't mention Solha at all.
  • I still strongly feel, which has not been amended in the conversations that we've had, that the 5th and 6th paragraphs detail every piece of dialogue they share.
  • (To above) "As Solha continued to threaten the Republic and Amidala, Amidala told the Serennian that the rising amount of threats wasn't productive. Solha observed the senator waiting for something to happen, and then asked if she was waiting for his siblings to make an appearance. He continued and stated that his siblings and droids were making sure the ships in the courtyard couldn't fly and that the others were attacking the insurgents. He finished by saying it was unfortunate that Skywalker perished in such an unknown battle and place." Bits like this, aren't summarization, they're stating he said this, she said this, he continued, and continued, and finished by saying...she said back... There's precedent for status articles to have quips of dialogue here and there, but then summed up by the action of just saying, "they argued", and it resulted in whatever it was. The majority of this isn't necessary.
• The Equipment section should specify when he wore the garments, such as, that he wore the cloaks and such when he met Skywalker etc.
• The image from the "Raid on the factory" section discusses the diplomatic excursion they attended. Though they discuss the past event, it occurred much prior to. Should be tweaked at present to reflect that they're not currently at said diplomatic exchange.
• "Solha knew that there was a Jedi loose in the factory. However, he did not remember who Skywalker was, he then sent Thrawn and Skywalker to some improvised prison cells." I'm not sure this bit makes sense. It reads as if, he knows there's a Jedi, and he doesn't remember Skywalker, but then proceeds to go and put him in a cell, which implies that he would know, having done that.
• "The pair agreed on running a test..." a paragraph that can be shortened, as it does not mention Solha within it/he isn't present.
• "Then two B2s blocked the courtyard's opening to prevent any escape." - half sentence, under "Dealing with Skywalker"
• Instances of repetitiveness:
  • "Solha tried to impress Skywalker with his title, but his title did not impress the Jedi."
  • "he would open the shield when he was on the coordinates of the courtyard, that he was not stupid and he would not open it until it was truly necessary"—spookywilloww^talk 06:07, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
    • I've tried to fix everything. Please let me know if my attempts have been succesful. Specifically the first paragraph of "Raid on the factory." Thank you again for your help :) — Samonic (Talk) 09:20, 31 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Special thanks to Erebus Chronus, Lewisr, YakovChaimTzvi, Supreme Emperor, Imperators II and Shayanomer for the help, I appreciate it a lot! - Samonic (talk) 19:34, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• I put this here, because I'm not sure it qualifies as an objection. It's more like a question that I believe needs to be settled. In the Thrawn: Alliances Clone Wars timeline Thrawn indeed introduces himself as a Commander, but the later novel, Thrawn Ascendancy: Chaos Rising reveals that his actual rank in the Expansionary Defence Fleet at that point was Senior Captain. Which rank is the correct to use in this article?--Dionne Jinn (talk) 16:02, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Senior Captain, addressed. *Samonic (talk) 12:10, 12 January 2022 (UTC) 16:42, 14 January 2022 (UTC)

• I've recently expanded the article, I believe there is no longer any content to add. (In any case, it would be minor) Samonic (Ah, yes. The negotiator.) 08:16, 22 February 2022 (UTC)

Zeison Sha

• Nominated by: Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 21:00, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I believe I have addressed all of the concerns from its last Inquisitorius review. Please advise what else should be updated. If this goes well, I will also re-nom Yanibar. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 21:01, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
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Support

1. OOM 224 16:17, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
2. Really great to see your return. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 20:24, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
3. — Samonic 17:14, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
4. Welcome back. Shayanomer (talk) 17:44, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Vergence

• I believe that Star Wars: Knights of the Old Republic II: The Sith Lords should only be listed with {{Mo}}; the armor being shown isn't really necessary to mention there. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:11, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Changed. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 15:47, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

From the desk of Macaroni

• Really fantastic to see your name on this page. Starting off, while we don't really have LG instructions specific to Force organizations, I'm going to suggest that we switch it to "Description" followed by the History that you currently have.
  • Added Description and moved "Philosophy" and "Common abilities" under there. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
• Seeing as Jedi vs. Sith is an IU guide, are there no more quotes we can add? I don't know if this was done in your day, but we treat IU material as quote material, like here.
  • Added a couple of quotes from Bodo-Baas. This is a new practice for me, to be sure. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
• I'd recommend looking through the article to make sure that everything that can be linked is linked.
  • Added a few links and moved a bunch around due to moving Philosophy/common abilities above History. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
• When citing multiple things at once, refs need to be in ascending order ([1][2] instead of [2][1]).
  • Done. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
• I'm not a huge fan of leaving a paragraph outside of subsectioning in History as well as have a subsection that's only one paragraph. Do you think that the subsectioning there can be reworked a bit to try and get at least two paragraphs in each?
  • Moved the offending paragraph under the Refuge from the Sith subheader. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
• {{CSWECite}} needs to be implemented for the citation.
  • Done. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Ideally, that should use the volume number in Roman numerals, the page number, and entry. See Haash'n as an example.
      • Numerals and entry, sure. I don't have that source so page number is not available to me. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 03:34, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
        • Sorry for the delay, have added the page number myself. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 18:49, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
• Have a Super Terrific Friendly Un-frustrating day. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 16:41, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Thank you, it has been thus far. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 22:48, 15 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Good, I hope you noticed that that was an homage to your Inquisitorius days :P
      • Inquisitorious? Now that's a name I haven't heard in a long time. A long time! (Yes of course I appreciated it). Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 03:34, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
• "Temple" links to a disambig page and needs to be removed.
  • Done. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 03:34, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
• The first paragraph of Common abilities has a couple consecutive refs to the Hero's Guide; only one should be necessary.
  • Corrected. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 03:34, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
• (Review note) See WP:DASH for dash instructions. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 16:16, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
  • I changed the one em dash to a comma since it didn't really need to be a dash anyway. The others I believe are correctly hyphenated but perhaps I missed an example or two. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 03:34, 18 January 2022 (UTC)
    • Yeah, that's why it's marked as a review note—just so you know for the future. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 03:54, 30 January 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• If KOTOR II is the only source that contradicts the ~2000 BBY placement, and sources published after KOTOR II support the original placement, then shouldn't that be treated as canonical instead?
  • I'm not sure why I didn't see this last time I checked objections. Anyway, I reread WP:CANON and it's not clear what to do about clearly-conflicting sources. Do we take a side and note in the BtS? Do we leave it conflicting? What is the usual accepted practice these days? Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 00:41, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
    • In general—and I believe it applies here based on the information on this article—more recent sources trump conflicting older sources in terms of canonicity, and when it's multiple sources vs. one source, the precedence is to treat the anomalous source as non-canon and note the contradiction(s) in the BTS. The information in the other sources would then be treated as canon. OOM 224 18:05, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Okay, so here's my dilemma. Shadows of Revan apparently has Zeison Sha mentioned in it. Not sure where or how since I'm not a SWTOR player, but that's set in 3638 BBY whereas the New Sith Wars are 2000-1000 BBY. I'll do some investigation and see if I can figure out what Zeison Sha entities are mentioned in there. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:58, 14 March 2022 (UTC)
        • Huh, SWTOR. This must be it then: https://torcommunity.com/database/schematic/LyBmD9O/might+of+the+zeison+sha OOM 224 17:30, 14 March 2022 (UTC)
          • Talking to some friends who play SWTOR, that's a non-player mission where you send your "crew" off to collect minor rewards. I think all we can say is that during the Third Galactic War, factions attempted to recruit aid from the Zeison Sha on Yanibar, but it's . . . completely optional. Do we still tag those with some kind of template for sidequest? Also still searching/discussing to see if there's any other content or mention. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 21:24, 15 March 2022 (UTC)
            • Yeah, that's about right. You can take the CA Wordro and the GA Kalki Nebula/Legends as examples of how to treat TOR Crew Skill missions. They're both recently passed, so they're up to the current standards for TOR article precedents. Let me know if you need more clarification. OOM 224 22:07, 15 March 2022 (UTC)
              • Okay, took a stab at this. Let me know what you think. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 21:11, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
                • Great, that works. I've changed some things to better fit current practice. OOM 224 21:53, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
• Chronicles of the Old Republic should replace that GameBanshee webpage, and a note should be added to explain the date since Chronicles doesn't mention Zeison Sha itself. OOM 224 20:01, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
  • Will get this sorted out tomorrow. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 00:41, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
    • I did take a second look at this but when I started looking at your first objection, that raised some questions about whether or not we even needed the website link and then RL kinda blew up. Will address once path forward is established on the previous objection. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:58, 14 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Changed this to cite The Essential Atlas instead for the date of KotOR II rather than an archived web page. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 21:11, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
• Context should be provided for Yanibar upon its first mention in the body
  • Moved up the mention to earlier in the body where it was already contextualized. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• "Their use of the discblade could also be further enhanced through the Force, whether by adding accuracy, calling the weapon back to the thrower, or imbuing the blade to make it stronger" — this sentence seems to be redundant to the rest of its paragraph
  • Agreed, removed. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• The article body is somewhat lacking in illustrations, and I think there's space for you to add at least two more images
  • Done. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• It would be nice to provide a BBY date for the rise of the Empire OOM 224 11:00, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Done. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• Also, the article says they're located in the Outer Rim, but for whatever reason the page itself is in Category:Wild Space organizations OOM 224 11:02, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
  • This is an interesting one, because different sources place Yanibar in Wild Space vs the Outer Rim. I'll categorize them in both if that's okay with you and have adjusted the wording surrounding Yanibar. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Cool, that makes sense OOM 224 16:20, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
• Final touches
  • A Zeison Sha warrior speaks to Jedi emissaries in the lead quote, but the event doesn't seem to be mentioned in the article body.
    • Yep, weaved this into the conversation about self-reliance brought up by Shayanomer. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
  • "For millennia after the original colonists had been abandoned on Yanibar" — abandoned by whom? Elaboration needed.
    • Added. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
  • "After their perceived betrayal by the Jedi" — similarly, some elaboration needed for "betrayal" to explain what this is about here.
    • Elaborated. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
  • "but children in training lived with their parents" — would be nice if you could merge this with the earlier statement about children remaining at home for the sake of concision.
    • Done. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Repetition of "independence and survival(,) as well as assistance to those in need" between the intro and History section. In fact, you could probably do without it in the History section and instead add in something about their abandonment, which seems to be information that is exclusive to the intro.
    • Tweaked. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
  • "A major development of Zeison Sha history" — unless the source says something to this effect, I feel like this is editorialising.
    • Ooookay, so this one's kinda messy. The problem is the divergent backstories for the Zeison Sha. KotOR/TOR imply the Zeison Sha are not only founded millennia earlier, but exist on Yanibar. That doesn't work at all with the other recorded histories (even IU as noted in EGTTF) that all have the New Sith Wars as the seminal trigger for the founding of the Zeison Sha. I'm happy to wordsmith this however you would like but while I could explain EGTTF away as incomplete information based on the IU narrator, JATM and Hero's Guide are OOU as far as I know. Thoughts on how to write around the continuity problem? If we assume both sources are correct and the Zeison Sha were established prior to the NSW on Yanibar, I would describe the arrival of thousands of colonists, many of whom were Force-sensitive and subsequently joined/absorbed the Order, as "major." Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Ooh, I see. In that case, I'd say the current wording works pretty well in integrating the info from all those sources. OOM 224 16:17, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Also, it's strange that that paragraph and the one right after doesn't mention the Zeison Sha by name at all, bar the instance I pointed out here. See if you can slip in a few. OOM 224 22:50, 3 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Tossed in a couple, but see my response to your previous objection. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:47, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

Shayanomer

• "The Zeison Sha were an order of Force-adepts known for their survival skills and resourcefulness..." I haven't quite seen this wording anywhere else in the article, which leads me to believe that this may not be supported by sources. Please reword if that's the case. Shayanomer (talk) 03:44, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • EGTTF explicitly states that the "original colonists might have perished had not some of them been Force-sensitive" and "their descendants developed a new Force tradition, the Zeison Sha, whose members used their talents to deal with the dangers native to Yanibar and defend the otherwise defenseless." I've reworded "resourcefulness" to "self-reliance" as that's better-supported by the text, but I don't think "survival skills" is original research based on the quoted passage. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
    • I was referring to "known for" actually, which I had already emboldened. Shayanomer (talk) 04:54, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
      • I've added some additional wording in "The outlanders" section to support. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 14:36, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
• Context for Darth Vader.
  • Added. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• The mention of the subject in Jedi vs. Sith should be documented in the body proper since it is an in-universe publication. Shayanomer (talk) 09:23, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Added. Atarumaster88 ^{(Talk page)} 18:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

Luca

• In the intro, you say: "after the original colonists had been abandoned." It is unclear, at least to me, who these colonists are. (You explain it well in the body, only the intro is a bit confusing, IMO).
• The first paragraph of "Common abilities" is rather large. How would you feel about splitting it up?
• "Little did they know that…" I'm not a fan of this sentence unless the source uses it. What about "They were not aware" or "they did not know?"
• Please, make sure to be ok with this copy-edit, and great work! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 14:02, 20 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Reviewing note: Please take care with which continuity you're linking to. Shayanomer (talk) 04:58, 25 April 2022 (UTC)

Haveland

• Nominated by: Shayanomer (talk) 16:06, 13 January 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Nice Legends pull by Zahn
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1. A nice read. — Samonic 17:49, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
2. Lovely work, Shay. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 15:24, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
3. Assuming OOM's objections will be addressed Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:03, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
4. OOM 224 09:47, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
5. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:37, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
6. AmazinglyCool (talk) 11:51, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

Governor Fanland

• "For three years, she and her forces faced great trouble in dealing with grallocs, a cousin species to mynock creatures, in the sector, and gleaned information about them." The final part of this sentence, about gleaning information, feels awkward. The word choice of "gleaning" in particular feels odd-in my expeireince gleaning tends to be more used for research rather than knowledge gained through experience.
  • Reworded. Shayanomer (talk) 12:39, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
• "She later tasked the Imperial forces at the Kurost transfer point with a dozen insurgency-suppression missions across the Esaga sector, leaving the transfer point defenseless against Grysk Hegemony forces." What's the point of mentioning the Grysk here? This is their only mention in the whole article. IIRC they were involved in the book, but there's no context as to why the transfer point would be defenseless against them specifically.
  • Removed that part since no direct connection between Haveland and the Grysk is actually made. Shayanomer (talk) 12:39, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
    • It still says it's defenseless-is there relevance in this? Fan26 (Talk) 18:40, 16 February 2022 (UTC)
      • The fact that the characters in the novel specifically point it out as a result of her actions? I'd say so. Shayanomer (talk) 03:34, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
• I think it would be good to provide the context that Assitant Director Ronan was a subordinate of Krennic's. Fan26 (Talk) 18:17, 22 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Used the book's term. Shayanomer (talk) 12:39, 23 January 2022 (UTC)

Dionne

• "The evidence was instead provided to Thrawn, who had initially suspected Haveland as the perpetrator, and the Seventh Fleet, before being sent to Savit's Third Fleet and exposing him as a traitor in the Empire." I'm not sure I understand what is going on in this sentence of the intro. Maybe little more context is needed.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 17:47, 31 January 2022 (UTC)
  • Done. Let me know if it reads better. Shayanomer (talk) 14:52, 2 February 2022 (UTC)
    • A little better, but still a bit confusing. Maybe try and split it to two different sentences? There was some time difference between Vanto and the Death Troopers bringing the info to Thrawn, and then Faro delivering it to the Third Fleet, so for me it doesn't make sense to have the two events crammed into one sentence.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 19:23, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
      • Split it per your suggestion. Shayanomer (talk) 06:18, 14 February 2022 (UTC)
• Any particular reason why Brierly Ronan and Dayja Collerand are not linked (and maybe even named?) when they are mentioned as individuals captured on Brylan Ross?--Dionne Jinn (talk) 18:33, 17 February 2022 (UTC)
  • They are though? Shayanomer (talk) 02:33, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
    • Oh, shavit! Apparently my objection is missing a critical bit: in the intro. They are later named and linked in the article, but I meant to say, they are not linked in the intro. My bad on that.--Dionne Jinn (talk) 04:38, 18 February 2022 (UTC)
      • Done. Thanks. Shayanomer (talk) 03:57, 25 February 2022 (UTC)

Brahaveland

• Does the novel capitalise moff? It would be more consistent with other novels to have it lower case (see here). Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 18:27, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Only capitalized when followed by a name, so I've fixed the other instances. Shayanomer (talk) 03:19, 21 April 2022 (UTC)
• You might wanna check which Seventh Fleet you've linked to :P Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 15:11, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Thanks. Shayanomer (talk) 16:40, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
    • No worries! Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 14:27, 13 May 2022 (UTC)

CC-8

• The second sentence of the second body paragraph could be broken up.
  • Are you referring to this? "There, the cargo, consisting of valuable components such as point-defense turbolaser batteries, was switched out with lower-level components." This already looks pretty short enough to me. Shayanomer (talk) 11:29, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Oops, meant to write third sentence Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:19, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Done. Shayanomer (talk) 09:37, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
• The intro says that the individuals aboard the Brylan Ross had the evidence against Savit, while the body just says that the evidence was found aboard the ship. Also is there any description of what the evidence actually is? Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:19, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Reworded. There is a pretty long and complex explanation, but I don't think that's relevant to this article. Shayanomer (talk) 11:29, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• Made a copy-edit, especially for "Prisoner problem" since I was confused as to which Grand Admiral it was referring to at various points.
  • Looks good, thanks. Shayanomer (talk) 09:29, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
• "Meanwhile, on the planet Aloxor within the Esaga sector, Imperial Captain Lochry's Star Destroyer, Stormbird, captured the freighter Brylan Ross, with Imperial Security Bureau agent Dayja Collerand and Assistant Director Brierly Ronan, one of Krennic's senior associates, on board." — it would help to clarify which one is the senior associate here.
  • Switched places. Shayanomer (talk) 09:29, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
• "before being changed to "Haveland" within the same feature in the subsequent issue in February 1996, also written by Sudlow. The latter spelling was carried over to 2008's The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia." — given that "Haveland" is treated as the correct spelling, I believe it's okay to remove the CSWE sentence and just say the name was "corrected" rather than simply "changed" in the preceding sentence. OOM 224 14:47, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I wanted to introduce another source there to affirm that that is the spelling the writers stuck with. Shayanomer (talk) 09:29, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Fair enough OOM 224 09:42, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
• There's just enough room for an extra image under "Prisoner problem," btw, but I understand if you don't want to add one. OOM 224 14:48, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Any suggestions? I couldn't think of anything relevant. Aside from Thrawn, Faro and the 7th Fleet are the only subjects there with visual depictions, and they aren't directly relevant to Haveland. Shayanomer (talk) 09:29, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Resolved via Discord OOM 224 09:47, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
• Also, if we're going to suggest that the Canon Haveland was inspired by the Legends one, I believe it's also worth mentioning that the Legends Haveland was a male instead. OOM 224 15:05, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Done. Shayanomer (talk) 09:29, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

Purrgil

• Nominated by: CanePlayz (talk) 23:14, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: All objections from the failed nomination have been addressed, let's go for round 2!
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1. My Copy-edits. — Samonic 14:36, 30 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

Spookywilloww

• The "other mentions" section that is present - any particular reasoning these events aren't listed chronologically to their occurrence? Some of those occur pre-Empire, in Jenza's case, by a lot - so it doesn't make sense to have them all tucked at the end.
  • At first, the info about Tech was at another place in the History section. Then there was an objection from Immi stating that it wasn't really related to the other info around it and we decided to put it into an extra section where we also put other info unrelated from any big historical events. However, we can talk about restructuring that again if you want to. CanePlayz (talk) 22:22, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
    • The information does need to be chronological. Having say, 90 BBY at the very end, past the O BBY stuff, doesn't really compute. With some wiggling around I'm sure most of that section can either be sorted into the Age of the Empire or the section above, in date order.—spookywilloww^talk 18:12, 1 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Talked about on Discord, should be better now. CanePlayz (talk) 17:47, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
• In terms of event ordering, as well, what places "At one point, the Mining Guild pilot Ahhav encountered a group of purrgil in a TIE/mg Mining Guild starfighter and fired upon them in vengeance after having survived a previous encounter." after the events of Solo? I wasn't seeing much tie in dating, given it's just a card—if there is no dating for it though, might be better to put it before Solo's part.
  • Nothing. There is no info on whether it happened before or after. What makes you think it's better to place it before Solo's part? CanePlayz (talk) 22:22, 30 March 2022 (UTC)
    • It's almost implying 'at some point prior to 10 BBY..." by placing it after Solo's event. If it's before that, all it's under is 'Age of the Empire'.—spookywilloww^talk 18:12, 1 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Oh, I understand, changed it. CanePlayz (talk) 20:03, 1 April 2022 (UTC)
• The spelling inconsistency of "purgil" from "On the Wings of Keeradaks" could be stand to be tucked into the BtS somewhere.
  • Added. CanePlayz (talk) 02:56, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• Context for Corellia, Liberation of Lothal, Capital City, Peko-Peko Munzati.
  • Added context for Corellia and the Liberation. There is nothing we know about Peko-Peko Munzati and we've agreed on Discord that Capital City is self-contextualizing. CanePlayz (talk) 02:56, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• A few varying sw.com articles I've found missing from sources, please check: 1 2 3 4 5 6.—spookywilloww^talk 18:46, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Currently working on integrating all of them, I need to clear up some formalities about Blog posts on the Discord server first. CanePlayz (talk) 03:41, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Done, two of your posts actually contained new information (one for the body, one for the BTS), thanks! CanePlayz (talk) 11:58, 31 March 2022 (UTC)

Braha

• Context for Spectres in the intro. You also seem to give context only in its second instance in the bio.
  • Done. CanePlayz (talk) 11:58, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• Context for Kessel Run, Mining Guild, Rebels Recon, JP Balmet, Dave Filoni, Pablo Hidalgo, Black One.
  • Done. CanePlayz (talk) 11:58, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• Hera Syndulla is linked at least one instance too late and is given different context with it.
  • That's completely true, fixed. CanePlayz (talk) 11:58, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• Since Corellian is a denonym, I think it'd be good to include the species of Tivoche Bilure as well.
  • Good point, done. CanePlayz (talk) 11:58, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• Age of the Empire could use its own subsections.
• I think it would be worth mentioning the placing of the Call in the rebels series, specifically its season and episode numbers. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:04, 23 March 2022 (UTC)
  • True, done. CanePlayz (talk) 11:58, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• " Yushyn, the boss of the gas refinery, ordered his guards to keep the space creatures from feeding on the Clouzon-36. Pursuing their plan, Sabine Wren, a Mandalorian member of the Spectres, was about to use explosives…" whose plan? The Mining Guild's or the Spectres'?
  • Should be better now. CanePlayz (talk) 17:47, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
• "That forced the Spectres to alter their plan and Bridger was knocked off his gun emplacement by a laser blast." Who's laser blasting Ezra all of a sudden?
  • Should be clearer now. CanePlayz (talk) 17:47, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
• "The Purrgil King also saved Bridger from asphyxiation by finding his helmet." Ok, so Ezra's helmet is now separated from him. Did that happen when he was knocked off or what?
  • Should be better now. CanePlayz (talk) 17:47, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
• "That connection enabled him to team up with the group of purrgil in their fight against the Mining Guild. The purrgil helped the Rebels by destroying one of the TIE fighters and dragging Yushyn into the crater…" Ok, I feel like you made a little time jump here. Can you explain that they began another attack? And also the TIE fighters feels out of nowhere, the Mining Guild's TIE fighters or some thing like that would be better.
  • I hope it's better now. CanePlayz (talk) 17:47, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
• "during the Liberation of Lothal from Imperial control" I'm not into the fact you mention the event with Lothal's name before you introduce what Lothal actually is. I'd recommend something like "during the liberation of the Imperial occupied planet Lothal" or something like that. Occupation of Lothal would be a beneficial link in that case as well. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 12:16, 1 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Yeah, right. CanePlayz (talk) 17:47, 3 April 2022 (UTC)
• The 7th Fleet is introduced as 7th and Seventh in the intro and body respectively. I'd advise some consistency on how that's handled. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 14:59, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Fair point, changed. CanePlayz (talk) 20:54, 13 May 2022 (UTC)

Space whales

• Can Purrgil be considered "Hyperspace technology"? I do not think a living being is technology… (I say this because of the category "Hyperspace technology")
  • You're right, don't know how I've never questioned that category being there. CanePlayz (talk) 10:18, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
• (Review note) Nice work.— Samonic 09:32, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Thanks :) CanePlayz (talk) 10:18, 30 April 2022 (UTC)

ThrawnChiss

• Purrgil are mentioned in Kenobi, please update. -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 13:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• My copy-edit. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 12:16, 1 April 2022 (UTC)
• New source for your article. SilverSunbird (talk) 20:40, 18 April 2022 (UTC)

Zingo Gabnit

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:02, 8 February 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: This whole comic is basically a spaghetti western so theme music
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1. — Samonic 09:28, 30 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

OOM

• Unlike in Legends, "rebel" on its own shouldn't be capitalised in Canon articles.
  • Forgot to get that, done
• You'll want to double-check and see if you really want to link to this Thermal Detonator article :P
  • facepalm
• I think it'd be better to refer to the Xan sisters simply as "criminals" rather than a "criminal organization," considering there's only two of them. OOM 224 22:06, 23 February 2022 (UTC)
  • It's a wider gang per this line about them in the comic "They've been terrorizing the local farms for years, I've picked off a couple of their gang members, but I can't finish them alone." Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 01:49, 26 February 2022 (UTC)

Shayanomer

• I feel "mean" is a bit informal and would prefer alternatives.
  • Done
• I can see he has an NN-14 blaster pistol. Shayanomer (talk) 04:54, 12 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Added, do I need another source to identify the model? Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 08:28, 13 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Not needed, we can visually identify it. Shayanomer (talk) 10:52, 13 March 2022 (UTC)
• On my display, at least, those bio paragraphs are pretty large and need some further breaks e.g. The first paragraph of Cornered is 15 lines long. This will in fact create more space for additional images. Shayanomer (talk) 10:56, 13 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Hope I haven't gone overboard Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:29, 14 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Much better looking overall. Shayanomer (talk) 10:03, 14 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• I restructured the bts, let me know if you have an issue with it. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 17:28, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
  • All g Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 01:39, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

Capture of Harte Secur

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:48, 23 February 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: This is the version of Phantom Menace I want to see
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1. Shayanomer (talk) 03:27, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
2. — Samonic 15:00, 30 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

Shayanomer

• Duplicate ref in the last paragraph of "Retrieving the program."
• This doesn't read right: "Behind them, an archway a small courtyard with a large archway led into the main courtyard of Harte Secur....".
• If the game capitalizes nouns like "Steadfast" and "Tuskcat Trooper," then that should be reflected here.
• Units provided where?: "However, the strategy guide describes the level as a seek-and-destroy mission that can be completed with only the units provided."
• Would like the previous mission named, and the fact that it's in the same campaign mentioned as well: "Nute Gunray informs OOM-9 that EEK-176, a droid from the previous mission....." Shayanomer (talk) 05:39, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
  • All done Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 00:18, 11 April 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• The title is conjectural, yet you use {{1stID}} in Appearances. What's going on here? OOM 224 07:37, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• Reviewing note: Found lots of missing links and spelling mistakes. Gotta be careful with this in the future. Shayanomer (talk)

Unidentified Tusken Raider youngling

• Nominated by: Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 01:52, 27 February 2022 (UTC) and Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:54, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: The first of many status articles from the WookieeNights crew! Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 01:52, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
  Absolute blast working on this together with Preem and others. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:54, 27 February 2022 (UTC)
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1. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:07, 28 March 2022 (UTC)
2. — Samonic 14:41, 3 April 2022 (UTC)

Object

CC-8

• The first intro sentence should mention Tatooine and avoid stating that the character is a youngling twice
• Missing some links, Youngling, Standard day, Sleep, Attack on the Kintan Striders
• "When Fett attempted to escape, a Rodian prisoner tied up beside Fett alerted the tribe, and the child ran at the escaped captive with his stick." This sentence starts out saying Fett is escaping while the last part suggests that he's already out
• Could you mention Tatooine's suns when talking about the sunlight in the body.
• 9 ABY as part of the date range is infobox exclusive Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 10:35, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • All addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 15:36, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
    • That intro sentence is still missing Tatooine, and just to save any readers the effort of looking them up independently I'd like to see the suns linked and/or named in that part Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:31, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Sorted. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 11:13, 22 March 2022 (UTC)
• Last thing, "Child of the Sand" has four paragraphs so it can be divided in two Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 05:44, 24 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Preem and I discussed this on the voice channel, the way the continuity works makes it hard to give it two sections without having to split it into a ratio of 1 to 3 paragraphs. 4 sections does not break any rules anyways (to my knowledge), it's just generally avoided. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:12, 25 March 2022 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Straight off the bat, that intro is way too long. It should be three paragraphs maximum for an article of this size.
  • Cut back. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 21:31, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• The date note saying that a source implied something is a no-no. Is he or is he not explicitly dead?
  • Reworded. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 00:30, 23 May 2022 (UTC)
• Species comes before gender.
  • Fixed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• Do none of the other refs other than the Tatooine DB support Tatooine being a planet?
  • The source establishes it's a planet right off the bat, I don't see why it needs to be changed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• The fact that the melon contains milk is only mentioned in a file caption.
  • Mentioned in the body. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• I don't believe that an extra ref for the sand ape name is necessary.
  • Per here, I should source it since it's named after the episode came out. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• Is Trainspotting a real word? I'm not seeing it on dictionary websites.
  • Split it, if that helps. It had originally been worded the same way as the film title "Trainspotting," the reference I had been going for, albeit it was a stretch I know. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• Is the "Trainspotting" quote missing a word or what he says in the episode?
  • Nope, it's correct, per the subtitles. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• I don't really see a need to name the suns.
  • I don't think it's excessive, but I have no strong feelings about trimming it, so it's been trimmed. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 02:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• I believe that Jabba the Hutt and Other Bounty Hunters and Criminals uses ASW4, not ABY, so elaboration is needed. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 23:02, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Reworked that into {{BOBFDate}}. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 00:30, 23 May 2022 (UTC)

Lotho Minor (Redux review)

• Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 135.
• Date added: March 4, 2022

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Support

1. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 23:59, 9 March 2022 (UTC)

Object

Shayanomer

• Firstly, please finish the pending updates. Shayanomer (talk) 01:52, 5 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Completed. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 23:59, 9 March 2022 (UTC)
    • I'm checking if Anil is fine with the edits before striking. Shayanomer (talk) 03:17, 10 March 2022 (UTC)
      • Some more details were added from the new sources, which I have reviewed now. Shayanomer (talk) 03:25, 13 March 2022 (UTC)
• No need to list the locations within a point of interest in the infobox (i.e. Ruen's workshop), it works like a hierarchy.
• The second paragraph of "Galactic dumping ground" can use another image, suggestions include Jawas or Cymoon 1.
• Wreck Belt should be documented under Locations instead of Description, since it's not a naturally-occurring formation.
• I do think Slingshot and Dizzy's encounter is historical information and therefore should go into History.
• Traveler's Guide to Batuu is an in-universe publication, so the mention of the planet needs to be documented here.
• Full release date needed for Return to Vader's Castle issue and "Hoth and Other Outer Rim Planets." Shayanomer (talk) 09:55, 16 May 2022 (UTC)
  • All addressed. About the objection for adding another image, I've made a slight change in one or two images' location to add a new one that is more relevant to Lotho Minor. Please take a look and let me know what you think. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:42, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
• Please let me know if you are satisfied with these changes. Shayanomer (talk) 08:52, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

Imp

• Awww yeaaahh infobox-exclusive info Imperators II^(Talk) 19:47, 11 March 2022 (UTC)
  • What the heck were they doing in the infobox in the first place, eh? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:37, 11 March 2022 (UTC)
• The BTS bit about Hunters doesn't make it immediately clear as to which of the two characters mentioned there is "the droideka". And that first sentence kind of smacks like a simple reiteration of the fact that the game has IU info relevant to Lotho Minor. It isn't strictly necessary for introducing the fact that the planet's name was a part of the cosmetics.
• In order to reduce the unsightly clunkiness of the two short paragraphs at the end of the BTS, I believe they both could be moved further up in the section. The Legends bit feels like it can be moved to before the discussion about the Star Wars Adventures comic, and the Hunters bit would work immediately after it. That way we could have three meaty paragraphs on 1) the subject's portrayal "milestones", 2) info on further Canon depictions, and 3) contradictions.
• Speaking of contradictions, what is the reason for treating the BMF issue as correct over the Encyclopedia one? I thought the general idea behind BMF was that in the case of any contradictions we defer to sources that are unambiguously Canon. If there are in fact other sources that reinforce BMF's claim, those should then be noted. Imperators II^(Talk) 10:25, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed the objections above. About the last one, I couldn't find another source that clarifies the amount of visitors to the planet, so changed the article to support the Encyclopedia's claim instead. Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 16:00, 21 April 2022 (UTC)

Black Cavern

• Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 20:08, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: If I had a nickel for every time this comic series introduced a talking natural formation, I'd have two nickels—which isn't a lot, but it's weird it happened twice.
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1. This is one of the articles I've enjoyed the most :) — Samonic 07:08, 19 May 2022 (UTC)
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Fan

• Time/Legends should be linked to in the second paragraph of "Wicket dares to enter"Fan26 (Talk) 21:43, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
  • I don't know what you're referring to, and linking is a sofixit anyway.
• "gorge in the cavern's ground." Does this mean the gorge was inside the underground cavern? The wording is a littke confusing here IMO Fan26 (Talk) 21:51, 7 March 2022 (UTC)
  • The cavern is above ground, like a cave. I'll send you a pic of it on Discord. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 00:48, 9 March 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• "It was the home of the sun crystals, which many individuals had tried to retrieve such from the cavern over the years, though few had succeeded." Not sure if this qualifies as an objection: Is the "such" necessary? I don't understand why it is used in that sentence. On an unrelated note, this article is very interesting, I should read and watch some Ewoks content! — Samonic 20:15, 18 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Yeah, that's a typo, thanks. And WP:Ewoks is always looking for more editors! JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 20:29, 18 May 2022 (UTC)

Shodu Warrick

• Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 04:54, 10 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: A monster Ewoks nom, good luck to anyone brave enough to review this
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1. Nice. OOM 224 16:58, 9 May 2022 (UTC)

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OOM

• Here goes:
  • Second Biography image is indenting the subsection header on my display
    • Made it smaller.
  • Gonna have to ask you to vary your word choice here, e.g. "after," "but"
    • Hard on an article of this size but tried to mix it up a bit.
  • Would be nice to the quote attributions be a bit more descriptive rather than stating the names of the speakers, especially in the Biography section
    • How's that?
  • "things would not have been the same" — any way to make this more formal? OOM 224 22:28, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Done. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 02:29, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
• Gosh, the Ewok films have terrible lighting:
  • Given the less-eventful nature of the "Mother of four Ewoks" section, I can see why its contents were left out of the intro, but perhaps you could sum it up by saying that she raised her children, caring for them and helping to teach them to be brave/considerate.
    • Er, what's your source on that?
  • "falling comet" — should clarify that Wicket thought it was a comet, given that it's not actually one. Also, I assume it was your intention not to link "vessel" in the next paragraph since it's not really a starship?
    • Done, and I don't remember if that was intentional but it is correct.
  • "who ran inside" — inside where?
    • Added.
  • For the next subsection, I think it'd be clearer if you remove "albeit incorrectly" and explain in another sentence that the other Ewoks realised Wicket was actually alive later on.
    • Done.
  • "Shodu was standing outside" — sorry to do this again, but outside where?
    • Done.
  • It would help to explicitly establish that the Humans did not understand the Ewoks' language. Otherwise, their interactions might seem strange to some readers.
    • Done.
  • Inconsistency between "Cindel and Mace"/"Mace and Cindel"
    • Fixed.
  • I've noticed that Shodu calls Wicket "honey drop" at least twice, so that's something that could be added to P&T.
    • Added.
  • For the Equipment section, Shodu wore a purple dress when she woke Wicket up from his nightmare.
    • Pretty sure those are pajamas but done :P
  • As for the final paragraph about brown fur/gray fur, it seems to me that there's no need for it to be mentioned there at all. It's just that her fur changed colour IU as time went by (probably due to aging etc.) OOM 224 09:02, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
    • I just find that hard to believe IU - in the span of one year, her fur goes from completely brown to completely gray? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 22:35, 4 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Fair enough. Man, these Ewoks have a thing with changing fur colour :P OOM 224 23:15, 4 May 2022 (UTC)

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• A few things to note:
  • I was unable to find any filming info for Battle for Endor that applied to all of the scenes the way I did for Caravan of Courage—that is why there is none right now.
  • I'm treating her brown fur as non-canon for now, though I am willing to discuss it if anyone disagrees.
  • Yes, every single Ewoks episode, comic, picture book, and adaption has been checked. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 04:54, 10 March 2022 (UTC)

Oseon 5792

• Nominated by: Imperators II^(Talk) 08:48, 10 March 2022 (UTC)
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1. I can't believe I've read an article related with the Silentium again. But… it was enjoyable. — Samonic 08:36, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
2. Shayanomer (talk) 11:56, 13 May 2022 (UTC)

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Silentium? Why?

• Intro — Could you merge some of the paragraphs? I believe having 4 paragraphs of that size is unnecessary.— Samonic 08:58, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
  • I have cut down on the level of detail in the intro paragraphs but I do not believe that joining them into larger ones is of any benefit since they are currently well-divided thematically: the first one's Description; the second one's History prior to Calrissian's arrival; and the third and fourth one are the rest of History, split up at the point of the sudden, surprising murders. Imperators II^(Talk) 06:55, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Makes sense, thank you, nice to know.— Samonic 08:36, 29 April 2022 (UTC)

Subjugation of Parrlay

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 14:24, 13 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: This is just the beginning
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1. I have enjoyed this read a lot. Awesome work! — Samonic 09:35, 7 April 2022 (UTC)

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I've done what I believe is a fairly comprehensive search through all the TPM related sources that I can find, but here's a list of everything that I suspect mentions this or uses one of the two TPM lines of dialogue quoted in the article:

• Jedi Escape
• Star Wars Episode I: The Phantom Menace (reference book)
• Star Wars Episode I: The Data File
• Star Wars Episode I: The Phantom Menace (PhotoComic)
• Star Wars: Episode I Insider's Guide
• Star Wars: The Official Starships & Vehicles Collection 62
• Episode I Adventures Game Book 13: Danger on Naboo

Always happy to see what other info might be out there Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 14:24, 13 March 2022 (UTC)

Bultar Swan

• Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 14:14, 18 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: As suggested by VergenceScatter on Discord. Swan was always one of my favourite minor Jedi thanks to the comics.
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1. Great work! VergenceScatter (talk) 17:11, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
2. — Samonic 14:17, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
3. AmazinglyCool (talk) 01:13, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
4. OOM 224 07:02, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
5. Fan26 (Talk) 00:48, 5 May 2022 (UTC)

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OOM

• Those On the Front Lines quotes: IIRC, we're not treating the book as an IU document, but do we know in what context she gave her thoughts then? I'm thinking it would be nice to note that in the body, given how she seems to be reflecting upon her experiences of Geonosis in the quotes. OOM 224 08:08, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Yeah I really wasn't sure how to handle that since we don't treat that book as existing in universe and so there's no obvious context for the accounts included in it. Just saying "Swan later gave an account of her experiences in the battle" seemed so vague as to not be worth including, but I can add it if you'd prefer. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:11, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Sorry for the delayed response. Yeah, I'd say it's best to include that, if only to acknowledge the fact that the article includes evaluative quotes from her throughout. OOM 224 18:06, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
      • How's that look? Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:59, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
        • Great, that works OOM 224 07:02, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Fanry

• Nominated by: —spookywilloww^talk 23:54, 20 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Very happy with how it turned out, she's a great character.
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1. DFaceG (talk) 06:32, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
2. Good job :) Samonic (Talk) 07:39, 21 March 2022 (UTC)

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DFaceG

• The use of "(pictured)" on images is not necessary, at least not for every single image. DFaceG (talk) 06:07, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Nicked away most of them, felt the first kinda needed it though.—spookywilloww^talk 06:19, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Instead of utilizing "pictured" or "logo pictured" in parenthesis for the Jedi Order and Galactic Republic logos, the captions could be rephrased to indicate that they were the logos without going into an aside. DFaceG (talk) 06:26, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
• Is there a higher resolution version of the image used for the Blackguard? DFaceG (talk) 06:09, 21 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Nope. There's only a few places to pull that book cover from, and it's a very slim slice of the cover that has the blackguards on it.—spookywilloww^talk 06:19, 21 March 2022 (UTC)

Robin Pronovost

• Nominated by: Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 08:37, 25 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: As one of the inspirations for the existence of WP:Pride, it's been my great pleasure to put a solid year's work into and now nominate Robin's article. Due to those circumstances, I contacted and confirmed that they're good with having their article nominated and with the initials that are present on their older artwork.
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PadawanRyan (he/him/his) (talk) 23:53, 2 April 2021 (ET) (Vote struck per policy: Insufficient mainspace edit count -- Imperators II^(Talk) 21:43, 4 April 2022 (UTC))

1. Well done.— Samonic 09:00, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
2. OOM 224 07:33, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
3. Would be sweet if we could have it pass during pride month! NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 10:59, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

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OOM

• I'd say there's no need to mention their dual citizenship in the infobox. OOM 224 22:19, 3 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Actually, nevermind this.
• Hmm, is there really a need to mention Galactic Battlegrounds? Given that the bursas in the game were based on the ones in Terryl Whitlatch's field guide, and the article has already mentioned that Robin's artwork were the basis for Whitlatch's designs, I don't think there's a need to further track the progression of this particular design. OOM 224 10:03, 4 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I couldn't determine whether Field Guide or Galactic Battlegrounds released first (both in November 2001 but only have an actual day for the game), so I'm not certain how to handle it. I definitely think they should be mentioned re: Field Guide because Whitlatch drew on Robin's designs, but I see your point about further going into Galactic Battlegrounds as it's currently written. Thoughts on how to approach that? Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 15:29, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Oh, I see. Yeah that makes things trickier. Then it's probably best to keep the mention of Galactic Battlegrounds, but I'd say the Clone Campaigns expansion pack part can go. OOM 224 15:52, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Change made! Let me know if the sentence flow needs a tweak. Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 05:06, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
        • Awesome, that looks fine! OOM 224 07:33, 13 May 2022 (UTC)

NanoLuuke

• Quotes: contextual information for the second quote (", from their profile on StarWars.com in 2005"), and third quote (", on Robin Pronovost's designs for his cancelled reference book The Essential Guide to Episode I") feels unnecessary. The former is redundant to the reference while the latter is self-explanatory with the content of the quote itself. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 23:58, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Changed! Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 03:47, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Should we maybe link Jaxxon in the first image caption ("Art for the tutorial "Drawing Jaxxon")? While the MOS state "subjects not linked elsewhere in the article (excluding references) may be linked in Image captions", tables have not really been covered by the MOS (hence the recent CT in this regard)... Given it's not linked in the prose, I feel as it could be linked there too, especially since the caption appear in the article long before the table. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 23:58, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Sure! Done so now. Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 03:47, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Using "Jedi" instead of "Return of the Jedi" is too colloquial. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 23:58, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Changed! Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 03:47, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• References/Sources: Do we usually add disambiguation dates ("{{C|1998}}") to references and sources? I feels like the wikilinks and proper naming of the document is sufficient. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 23:58, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I'm not sure! I'd done it since we usually don't include the year in the wikilinks itself, but without seeing the year, you end up with listings that look like duplicates when they really aren't. ex. what's currently *"''Star Wars'' Funnies" — [[Star Wars Kids 8 (1998)|''Star Wars Kids'' 8]] {{C|1998}} could be changed to *"''Star Wars'' Funnies" — [[Star Wars Kids 8 (1998)|''Star Wars Kids'' 8 (1998)]] if that's cool? Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 03:47, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
    • I'm not really sure and I'd probably want the opinion of other reviewers on this. I'll ask on Discord to get some quick consensus. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 08:37, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
    • After consulting Imperators, it seems you're in the right here. No need to change anything ;) . NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 10:24, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
• Per LG/OOU, the mediacat should be in Sources. NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 23:58, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Is splitting a Source's title into 2 lines considered interfering with the presentation of titles? That's the reason I'd put it in References, per LG/OOU. If it isn't, I'll make that change! Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 03:47, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
    • I would say yes, but then again, I'm not seeing it do this in preview (and it's even narrower than the live version of the page). NanoLuuke^{Cloning facility} 08:37, 26 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Facepalm time: I must've been using increased font settings and/or something has changed since I'd previously looked into that. Change made! Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 21:54, 26 May 2022 (UTC)

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Although I'm technically still on hiatus, the FAN process takes awhile and I'll check in for feedback. Immi Thrax (she/her) (talk) 08:37, 25 March 2022 (UTC)

Khar Delba

• Nominated by: Goodmind (talk) 20:38, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
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OOM

• Unless it explicitly mentions Sadow owning Khar Delba, Jedi vs. Sith is not sufficient for sourcing "By 5000 BBY." An expanded date note, like the ones in the FA Simus, should be implemented instead.
  • It mentions him owning a fortress--Goodmind (talk) 11:25, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
    • Okay, but does it mention Sadow owning the fortress on Khar Delba? OOM 224 11:36, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
      • "Kressh's rival for the title of Dark Lord of the Sith was Naga Sadow, who had a fortress on Khar Delba, but also kept a secret stronghold in a crater on Khar Delba’s moon, Khar Shian."--Goodmind (talk) 13:25, 27 March 2022 (UTC)
• It would be worth checking The Essential Guide to Warfare since it mentions that Sadow became viceroy of Khar Shian, which the start of the "Naga Sadow's decoy" section would benefit from including.
  • Fixed--Goodmind (talk) 20:41, 7 April 2022 (UTC)
• IIRC, Kressh didn't want to destroy Sadow's decoy fortress per se. He wanted to destroy Sadow's fortress, but he did not realise that the one he was attacking was actually a decoy. Would be great if you could re-read the comics to confirm this. OOM 224 21:21, 26 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed--Goodmind (talk) 13:25, 27 March 2022 (UTC)

Panno

• Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:36, 31 March 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
• WookieeProject (optional): Wookieepedia:WookieeProject Fantasy Flight Games

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1. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 00:56, 20 April 2022 (UTC)
2. Shayanomer (talk) 04:55, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
3. Panno; no bread? ("Pan" is bread in Spanish) — Samonic 12:33, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
4. Remaining objections resolved via Discord. OOM 224 15:50, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

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Macaroni

• The name of the first subsection is super long, can you try something else?
• Second section can definitely be split into two.
• On the topic of that section - you've got three full paragraphs without a single mention of Panno. Is all of that detail really necessary? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 03:56, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
  • All addressed. With the paragraphs, just added Panno's name because that appearance involves all strike team. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:45, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
• Can you specify what Stage 3 is referring to? JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 00:36, 20 April 2022 (UTC)

Shayanomer

• Let's see an image under "Attack on the shield generator and Alliance victory," maybe of the celebration. Shayanomer (talk) 04:22, 9 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Added. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 04:35, 9 May 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• If you follow the link to the Legacy Collection figure, you can see that the packaging features an illustration of Panno wearing a brown hooded cloak. This should be covered in tha article.
• Missing link/context for Han Solo.
• I don't see a need to specify the ship types of either the Home One or the Tydirium.
• "a uniform similar in appearance to the Alliance Cold Weather armor sans headgear, gloves, and backpack. However, Panno's uniform differed from the Cold Weather armor through him wearing forest camouflage pants" — The first sentence goes into the differences between the clothing already, so the second sentence should be amended to accomodate that.
• The shooting location of the Home One scenes should be specified. OOM 224 15:04, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
• Images should be enlarged.
• Also, can you shorten those subheading titles? Unfortunately, half of the intro space is blank on default view. OOM 224 15:06, 28 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:14, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

Defender

• Nominated by: Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 02:56, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: The Defender is here
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1. Good job VergenceScatter (talk) 17:17, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
2. ^ — Samonic 18:01, 30 April 2022 (UTC)

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• Complete Vehicles New Edition mentions 52 point-defense laser cannons (not sure if this is meant to be the same as light laser cannons) and doesn't specify their location. And when are these depicted in the episode? Loqiical (talk) 06:16, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
  • For some reason, Complete Vehicles changes it to "point-defense laser cannons" as opposed to what they are actually called. For example, it calls the Munificents twin turbolaser cannons "point-defense cannons," when no other sources call them that. You can also see them in the episode along the framing. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 13:53, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
    • If we are unclear about what is what, I think that those things should just be left out. Additionally, the book doesn't label those cannons as point-defense laser cannons or light laser cannons or whatever... it seems that we are just making an assumption. Loqiical (talk) 05:29, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Also, I was looking at Point of No Return and in the scene when the droids are flushed out the airlock, you can see dozens of these cannons in the portion of the hull in front of the starboard medium dual turbolaser. So this suggests that there are a lot more than 52 of them. Loqiical (talk) 02:38, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
• Are there any sources in canon that give specific function to each of the bridge towers? I know there were some in Legends, but I don't know if that made its way into canon yet. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:37, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • There are. Left bridge is starfighter flight control and the right is labeled "helm and command bridges." Never been asked to include their functions on any of my Venators so far, though. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 22:49, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
    • In that case, it seems like valid info about the ship. I think you should dd it. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:59, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Sure. Erebus Chronus ^(Talk) 23:08, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

Lazerian IV

• Nominated by: DFaceG (talk) 19:53, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
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• You should add an inhabitants section. The information currently in the government section should be there instead. VergenceScatter (talk) 21:20, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 04:05, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
• There is infobox exclusive information, such as the length of day and strength of gravity. VergenceScatter (talk) 21:25, 4 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 04:05, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
    • There's still infobox exclusive information about the population and the gravitational strength. VergenceScatter (talk) 04:09, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Fixed. DFaceG (talk) 04:23, 5 April 2022 (UTC)

Imp

• Please take care of redundant linking in the article. If you haven't already, you can enable the "Highlight duplicate links in articles" gadget in your Preferences, that should help you. Imperators II^(Talk) 08:23, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Duplicate links removed. DFaceG (talk) 18:37, 13 April 2022 (UTC)
• I'm seeing the "proseline" anti-pattern—the beginning of each paragraph beginning with the formula "in date X, Y happened"—consistently feature throughout the article. Please try and rephrase the paragraphs to introduce some compositional variety. Imperators II^(Talk) 18:25, 19 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Attempted a fix, let me know if it is sufficient. DFaceG (talk) 06:22, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• While the New Republic was indeed formed in 4 ABY, for all we know the events of Twin Stars of Kira related to Lazerian IV could have occurred in the same year. Please revise, including that subsection title. Imperators II^(Talk) 22:14, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Rewrote. DFaceG (talk) 19:50, 26 April 2022 (UTC)

Insurrection on Aaloth

• Nominated by: YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:29, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Lourna Dee.
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1. ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 21:28, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
2. Insurgents? Better call a pantoran with an eye condition! — Samonic 13:44, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

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Editor

• Could you give the first paragraph of aftermath a subsection title? Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:47, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Actually, I don't think it needs subsections at all at this point, aftermath can just remain its own section, although I'd move the Lourna image down a paragraph Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:48, 12 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Okay, done. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:41, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
      • ? the "Echoes through Lourna's life" subsection is still in aftermath Editoronthewiki (talk) 00:57, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
        • Oh, I see. Removed that heading and left the text. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 21:24, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

Samonic needs to read The High Republic

• If we have dating, which is the case in this article ("Some time between 272 BBY-232 BBY") I think it should be included in intro and body. Currently, you are saying "during the High Republic Era," please specify the dating.
  • It is in the body. I don't think it would be necessary in the intro, since it's a very broad range of possible dates. If you insist, though, I'll find a way to work it in. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:41, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
    • I would insist, but I do not see any FAs with dating in the intro... — Samonic 07:56, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• Context for Zygerrian Alliance, Palace Guard, Clan Assembly.
  • The Zygerrian Alliance has context in the body.
  • "Palace Guard" is self-explanatory.
    • Info needs to be on intro and body.— Samonic 14:53, 30 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Added context for Clan Assembly. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:41, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• Please add links for everything that can be linked, such as "Keeper" — Samonic 12:57, 18 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Keeper of Aaloth is already linked. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:41, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

AmazinglyCool

• Does it appear in the script?
  • Yes; added to appearances. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:41, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• The second reference is very confusing. Is it formatted correctly? AmazinglyCool (talk) 23:25, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • I couldn't figure out a better way to present the reasoning. The reasoning itself holds up, but I'd love if someone could help me make it smoother. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:41, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Objection(s) overridden by Inquisitorius 15:19, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

ThrawnChiss

*You have mislinked Pan Eyta as Pan Etya. -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 00:49, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

• • Fixed. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 21:24, 24 April 2022 (UTC)

Mission to Bardram Scoft

• Nominated by: YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:31, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another Yakov SAN that almost passed but went over the word count? Can't be :P
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Samonic

• Article could use some sectioning and some images. And with sectioning, some more quotes.— Samonic 17:18, 16 April 2022 (UTC)
  • I can't think of any ways to create subsections for the article. If you have ideas, I'd be happy to implement them. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 17:52, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
• Context for Prefect. — Samonic 12:37, 25 May 2022 (UTC)

Grizmallt/Legends

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:27, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Found an unexpected amount of detail
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Imp

• Please turn the TOR date citation reference into a manual ref note that pipelinks the TOR date citation template, there's no need to transclude that whole wall of text in this article. Plus you're not explicitly linking the Balmorra mission to Act II anyway. Imperators II^(Talk) 09:56, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Done Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 07:51, 25 April 2022 (UTC)

Celestial Chalice

• Nominated by: —spookywilloww^talk 23:08, 26 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: 1078 words...rip.
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1. — Samonic 18:18, 6 May 2022 (UTC)

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Samonic

• "The Celestial Chalice was a round temple located within the Pijali palace complex on Inner Rim planet Pijal. As an amphitheater dedicated to the ancient gods of Pijal…" is it an amphiteater or a temple? — Samonic 08:52, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
  • It's described as both in-text - by definition anyways, they shouldn't conflict to my knowledge.—spookywilloww^talk 18:07, 28 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Amphitheater is usually an open-air circle or place where ceremonies take place, a temple is not exactly the same.— Samonic 08:38, 29 April 2022 (UTC)
      • In this case - I firmly believe it's wholly fitting of both, quite honestly, per: "He stood in the Celestial Chalice, the curved amphitheater to the ancient gods within the Pijali palace. This was the place for the treaty ceremony, and everything was about to begin." The definition of temple, comparatively, is a building intended for religious worship. Given the Chalice was also used for other religious ceremonies in a monarch's reign and built to worship their gods'/traditions, it qualifies as a temple - one that happens to be open-aired and circular, with the seats in it that make it an ampitheater by physical traits.—spookywilloww^talk 00:06, 3 May 2022 (UTC)

OOM-9/Legends (Redux review)

• Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 137.
• Date added: May 4, 2022

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Macaroni

• I believe that current precedent is not to document degree of droids in individual droid articles and to save it for the series, since individual droids' degree never differ from their series. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 21:10, 5 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:32, 5 May 2022 (UTC)

D'urban Wen-Hurd

• Nominated by: SilverSunbird (talk) 02:04, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: hair flip
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1. The nomination par excellence. OOM 224 21:22, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
2. Just, wow.— Samonic 11:36, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

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Vitus

• This tweet will have to be incorporated into the BTS section. --Vitus Infinitus^Talk 02:16, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the heads-up on that. Done. SilverSunbird (talk) 02:30, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

Shayanomer

• Straight away I have to tell you that that intro is way too short for an article of this length, let alone this being a Featured article nomination. Please expand with more detail. Take a look at some of the site's longer and well-known FAs such as CT-7567/Legends and Executor/Legends to get a rough idea of a intro-to-body word count ratio that is expected. Shayanomer (talk) 03:16, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I trust the new intro length will be sufficient. SilverSunbird (talk) 03:29, 11 May 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• Review note: Just in case you don't know, you can enable the highlight duplicate links tool through Special:Preferences#mw-prefsection-gadgets and then, to activate the highlighting when viewing a page, click on the tool using the "My Tools" dropdown in your toolbar, at the bottom-right of your screen. That way it's a lot easier to find dupe links.
• I don't think there's a need to mention Sifo-Dyas.
• Would be nice if you could minimise the repetition of the word "after," particularly in the "Skywalker's disappearance" section. OOM 224 14:53, 20 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the tip.
  • Both done. SilverSunbird (talk) 21:16, 20 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

• I... your turnaround time is insane. Major props. Dentface (talk) 03:04, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
• Yeah great work! Had to give you a Wookiee Cookie for all your hard work with this novel --Vitus Infinitus^Talk 13:58, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
• Echoing the above, totally speechless! Amazing work. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 02:25, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
• The novel came out recently… and you have an article nominated for Featured article. Excellent job, SilverSunbird.— Samonic 09:44, 16 May 2022 (UTC)

Kem Monnon/Legends

• Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 03:30, 14 May 2022 (UTC)
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1. Nicely done.— Samonic 09:39, 16 May 2022 (UTC)

Aarrba's Repair Dock

• Nominated by: Imperators II^(Talk) 21:19, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: As I was re-reading Tales of the Jedi, I looked at that infobox image panel and then at this LEGO set that I'd recently built...
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1. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 21:09, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
2. — Samonic 12:33, 25 May 2022 (UTC)

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Braha's objection section

• The second intro para could use a bisection however you see fit. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 23:53, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Thanks, split. Imperators II^(Talk) 06:19, 22 May 2022 (UTC)

Jori Daragon's amulet

• Nominated by: Imperators II^(Talk) 14:48, 23 May 2022 (UTC)
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Jeremoch Colton

• Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 21:10, 23 May 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Not every day my GAs get retconned into doing things in two additional films.
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1. — Samonic 09:28, 28 May 2022 (UTC)

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Braha'moch

• Should there be a retcon label by Rogue One in the appearance section? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 23:10, 23 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Yup, good catch. Ayrehead02 (talk) 00:13, 24 May 2022 (UTC)

Generalirius Samoch

• Context for Order 66.— Samonic 08:56, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Done. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:16, 24 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Intro: I would say "Galactic Republic" is too unspecific, could you specify? — Samonic 08:55, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
      • In relation to Colton and especially in the intro I think that's sufficient. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:15, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
• Context for Clone Wars, Accresker Jail, Crimson Dawn. I don't know if it's really necessary, but: Being completely new to the terms "Sava" and "Madelin Sun," I have absolutely no idea of what they are, could you supply further context? — Samonic 08:55, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
  • I've added the combatants of the Clone Wars and context for Crimson Dawn. Accresker Jail is self contextualizing as it has jail in the name, and Sava is a title and so is the context for Madeline Sun, an individual, in the same way that you'd say Captain Jeremoch Colton. Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:15, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
    • Alright, thanks; perhaps specifying the prison's location would be nice? — Samonic 12:00, 25 May 2022 (UTC)
      • The prison is mobile so it doesn't have a location but I've added some additional context. Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:07, 25 May 2022 (UTC)

Voon

• Nominated by: Imperators II^(Talk) 16:11, 27 May 2022 (UTC)
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1. — Samonic 09:15, 28 May 2022 (UTC)