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Chubby Gundark[]
- Nominated by: Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 15:55, February 29, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Say it with me now ... Giant Amorphous Bantha Breakfast Biscuit!
(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)[]
Support[]
- Wankle. Heh.—Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 13:42, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
- 501st Dogma(Comlink) 21:43, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Plagueis327 01:50, March 3, 2012 (UTC)
- --Eyrezer 02:24, March 3, 2012 (UTC)
- Too bad Dark Horse killed this series. ~Savage 13:54, March 23, 2012 (UTC)
- Menkooroo 20:29, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
- JangFett (Talk) 21:56, April 23, 2012 (UTC)
Object[]
501st[]
40 cases purchased - 39 taken by the Imperials does not = 2 remaining cases to be sold- Good catch. Changed.
link for Bungo n' Rusti Get The Record! in the BTS.- It's already linked to in the previous sentence.
- My bad. 501st Dogma(Comlink) 21:43, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
- It's already linked to in the previous sentence.
- Nice article! 501st Dogma(Comlink) 00:00, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:45, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
Return of the Jedi[]
"The Chubby Gundark is cleared for landing" - Something about this for the opening quote irks me. Probably because the quote just said that they could land, so it's kind of redundant. I would change it myself, but you might want to modify it to your preference.Great work otherwise.—Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 03:33, March 1, 2012 (UTC)- Added a little clarification. Maybe that helps? - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:45, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
- A little bit better, but I wasn't necessarily looking for clarification. I understood fine who was speaking. My problem was that it seemed redundant to put "cleared for landing" right after the quote just got done saying that they were cleared for landing. I'll strike my objection since this is more just personal preference for me, but perhaps you could use something like "The Chubby Gundark and Sullust landing control." Do we even know who it was that the Chubby Gundark was talking to? I'll leave it up to you whether you want to tweek it more.—Cal Jedi (Personal Comm Channel) 13:42, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
- Added a little clarification. Maybe that helps? - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:45, March 1, 2012 (UTC)
It's just big-boned.[]
Infobox redlink, yo.- In my defense, that was not there when I nominated it. Solved.
I changed kmh to km/h in the infobox and body, but the fact that it appeared twice makes me wonder... am I wrong?- Well, the original stats have it as kmh, which I think was standard for WEG. Changed it back to correspond with original source.
Any quotes available for Description and Commanders & Crew? Some sort of exchange between Bungo n' Rusti might work for the latter.- Added.
"While searching for the creature, the Giant Amorphous Bantha Breakfast Biscuit surprised Bung..." reads as if the GABBB is searching for a creature. The later part of the sentence about the chase requires additional rewording, else I would have just sofixed it. :)- Try that.
The comic includes several additional shots of the Chubby Gundark. Since this article is on the ship, I think it should be populated by images of the ship, rather than semi-relevant images of other things. The Bungo image would definitely work for Commanders & Crew, but I'd like to see the History section include actual images of the Chubby Gundark.- I've added another image, but I don't want to overcrowd the article, and I really want the image of the Giant Amorphous Bantha Breakfast Biscuit. Because seeing is believing.
Not an objection, but I always recommend {{Cite_web}} for external sites used in references, as it can pinpoint dates and authors and include archive links. So, ya know, think about it.Great work. :) Menkooroo 03:27, April 7, 2012 (UTC)- Done. Thanks for the review. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 19:35, April 10, 2012 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 00:31, April 24, 2012 (UTC)