- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Political uprising of Empress Teta system[]
- Nominated by: —Tommy9281(Safe harbor, my friend.) 01:57, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Here we go...
(6 Inqs/0 User/6 Total)[]
Support
Master Aban Fiolli {Alpheridies University ComNet} 00:26, 16 May 2008 (UTC)
Thefourdotelipsis 05:54, 6 June 2008 (UTC)
Again! Chack Jadson (Talk) 21:46, 6 June 2008 (UTC)
Greyman(Talk) 20:12, 8 June 2008 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:30, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
Graestan(Talk) 16:05, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the Stadt of Chack Jadson:
Does political have to be capitalized? You tell me.- Nope, addressed.
I wouldn't say led by Korus, he was just dragged along.- Heh, addressed.
I dislike the phrase, "ever so gracious".Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:55, 4 June 2008 (UTC)- Addressed.
Remove this sentence:"He wasn't dead, however."- Addressed.
The way you format your quotes is inconsistent. Just holler if you need more clarification from me.Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:55, 4 June 2008 (UTC)- Well, I have the more-than-two person quotes formated with (Dialogue), and the two-person, single-line-each quotes formatted the other way, which I was told is how it should be done. I'm quite alright with changing it, however, if you deem it necessary.
- I didn't notice that one way was with three lines and the other with just two when I read it.
- Well, I have the more-than-two person quotes formated with (Dialogue), and the two-person, single-line-each quotes formatted the other way, which I was told is how it should be done. I'm quite alright with changing it, however, if you deem it necessary.
- Pretty nice. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:55, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
- From the Merciless Hammer of Toprawa:
Given the opening quote introduces the article's title, I'm not sure the Conjecture tag is so appropriate- I just noticed that Greyman added this, maybe discuss with him. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:30, 8 June 2008 (UTC)
You say that all Tetan officials were killed, but in the very next sentence Lord Keto is still alive. Please clarify: "proceeded to execute all the present Tetan officials, including Lady Keto."- I removed the "all", so as not to contradict myself in the very next line lol. Addressed.
What dining room wall? Please clarify: "Afterwards, Satal took the carbonite friezes and hung them on the dining room wall"- Addressed.
Please specify what world of the 6 out of 7 was not subdued. I'm guessing it's Empress Teta from this description. Please clarify this: "as Aleema located the insurrectionists on Empress Teta"- Addressed, I believe.
Please tone down the bolding in the "Final stages" audio quote.- Addressed.
In between the Final stages and Aftermath sections, the reader is left with the understanding that the Ketos moved to subjugate the system, but then the next paragraph begins with the system being subdued without explanation. Please state that they subjugated them, not that it's already happened as this reads: "With the military forces of the Empress Teta system in check"- Addressed.
This seems to read that you are referencing the local Republic government and Jedi leadership of the planet Empress Teta itself. Please clarify: "the ears of both the Republic government and Jedi leadership"- Addressed.
You have the TOTJ audio drama, which chronologically precedes the DLotS audio drama as I understand, as a Mentioned only appearance. How is this possible? Not that I doubt it's in there, but please clarify somehowToprawa and Ralltiir 21:22, 8 June 2008 (UTC)- Mistake. Addressed.
File:KorusPassedOut.jpg needs to have comic frame cropped at bottom and partial letters at top blanked. All the images should be resized a little bigger; I have to squint to make them out and they appear distorted as such small thumbnails. Graestan(Talk) 13:02, 10 June 2008 (UTC)- Addressed, and addressed. Sorry about the size thing, they looked adequate on my normal monitor, but I do know that I use a different size screen than others. At any rate, thanks for looking, Graestan, and if anyting else is required, I'm sure you'll catch up with me ;)—Tommy(There are no Jedi here) 14:36, 10 June 2008 (UTC)
Not so sure about the infobox. Could casualties be added, or at least the sides in the conflict split up? Graestan(Talk) 00:59, 11 June 2008 (UTC)- Addressed. I actually like it better in it's current incarnation;)
Comments
- Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 16:05, 11 June 2008 (UTC)
- I'm finally getting the hang of this.—Tommy9281(Safe harbor, my friend.) 01:57, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
- Thank you for looking, Chack.—Tommy(There are no Jedi here) 14:51, 4 June 2008 (UTC)
- As always, Toprawa, thank you for looking. Everything is addressed correctly I believe, and, if not, you know how to reach me.—Tommy(There are no Jedi here) 15:28, 9 June 2008 (UTC)