- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a featured article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
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Praven[]
- Nominated by: Cade Calrayn 18:56, April 16, 2013 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: Project Hero. This guy's an excellent character.
(3 Inqs/4 Users/7 Total)[]
Support[]
- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 22:39, April 25, 2013 (UTC)
- 501st dogma(talk) 00:01, April 30, 2013 (UTC)
- Sir Cavalier of One(Squadron channel) 11:20, May 1, 2013 (UTC)
- Jinzler (talk) 19:08, August 11, 2013 (UTC)
- CC7567 (talk) 21:28, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
- Supreme Emperor (talk) 02:21, August 22, 2013 (UTC)
- Trip391 (talk) 03:01, August 22, 2013 (UTC)
Object[]
Floyd[]
Not an objection per se, but is there an article for the assault on the Jedi Temple, or is that part of the Sacking of Coruscant article as a whole?- Nah, it's part of the Sacking.
"and they witnessed Darth Malgus aid his Twi'lek lover, Eleena Daru, after she had been injured in the battle." Is there any particular significance to this?- Not really; Malgus notices the remaining Sith watching him while he tends to Eleena, and Praven was one of those Sith.
Would like just a little more context on the Treaty of Coruscant.- Done.
Since it's so relevant, could we get a little more info on the Shock Drum? What does it do?- Done.
"Praven sent the Jedi the coordinates for the Esus Mesa and awaited his opponent there, and he was at the far edge of the mesa, gazing out across the Dune Sea, when he sensed the Knight's powerful presence in the Force approaching." The flow here is pretty bad. Fix.- Done.
"Praven understood that Tarnis had died because the Knight was more powerful than he was," Than who? Praven or Tarnis?- Fixed.
"Having shed his title of Lord in exchange," In exchange for what?- Bah, fixed.
"Praven's pride in his heritage was so strong that he killed an Imperial officer for not showing him the proper respect." How exactly does this relate to his heritage?- IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 03:10, April 24, 2013 (UTC)
501st[]
Intro: there's a bunch of events that you could link to. Do so.- Done.
Early life: "...sometime before the end of the Great Galactic War with the Sith Empire." I believe you mean with the Republic.- Fixed.
Please make sure you link to everything that is important, including events. In the Early life section you are missing the link to the attack on the Temple, and I'm certain you are missing other event links later on.- There isn't an article on the attack on the Temple; it's just the Sacking of Coruscant.
Context on Nar Shadda and Alderaan in Angral's fury.- Done.
Confrontation and redemption is a little play by play. Praven said this, Hero said that, so could you maybe cut it down a bit?- 501st dogma(talk) 23:49, April 29, 2013 (UTC)
Attack of the Clone[]
Is it applicable to link ground warfare anywhere?- Done.
To clarify, throughout Praven's career as a Sith, was he always Angral's apprentice? Even at the time of Tarnis' death (by which time Praven was a Sith Lord)?- Apparently, yeah. All three are consistently referred to as Angral's apprentices.
Please mention the Galactic War somewhere in the Bio.- Done.
- Since you mention the Cold War earlier in the article, I'd like to see a bit more context on the Galactic War as a full-scale follow-up to the Cold War. Perhaps adding something like, "Eventually, the Cold War escalated into the Galactic War. In 3,641 BBY, Praven…" CC7567 (talk) 08:53, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
- Done. Cade Calrayn 16:21, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
- One more: is the "almost two years later" still correct where it is? Due to the sentence that was just added about the start of the Galactic War, the article currently seems to be saying that the Battle of Corellia (3,641 BBY) started "almost two years" after the onset of the Galactic War. Just wanted to make sure that's correct. CC7567 (talk) 21:13, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
- Done. Cade Calrayn 16:21, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
- Since you mention the Cold War earlier in the article, I'd like to see a bit more context on the Galactic War as a full-scale follow-up to the Cold War. Perhaps adding something like, "Eventually, the Cold War escalated into the Galactic War. In 3,641 BBY, Praven…" CC7567 (talk) 08:53, August 21, 2013 (UTC)
- Done.
For the Appearances section, I would suggest changing {{Imo}} for Deceived to (Indirect appearance only) or something like that, because it's more of an appearance than a mention (if that makes sense). You might also consider adding {{1stp}} to TOR, since that was his first visual depiction.CC7567 (talk) 21:22, August 20, 2013 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Featured article by Inquisitorius 03:02, August 22, 2013 (UTC)