Does the source actually use the elipses in the opening quote? If so, then it's fine, but if not, then the elipses should be enclosed like so: […]
Added square brackets.
Do we know for sure whether Barkbone went insane, or is this just Tigellinus' speculation? The bio and intro make it sound for sure like Barkbone lost his sanity, but in the P&T you say only that Tigellinus questioned his sanity.
I'd also suggest that you go through the article once and make sure that none of the links are redirects—I caught a few in my copyedit, but it might be a good idea to double-check for good measure.
I cleaned up all the other redirects. --Eyrezer 12:13, August 13, 2010 (UTC)