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This page is for Good article nominations. A Good article is an article that adheres to certain quality standards but cannot reach Featured status due to its limited content. In turn, a Good article features more detail than a Comprehensive article. On this page, users can nominate articles that they believe are ready to be reviewed to achieve Good status.

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Ginder

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 12:22, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 3 AC vote(s) required to reach minimum. No additional votes required to pass, please consider reviewing another article.)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal.svg(Talk) 09:57, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
  2. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 13:13, July 6, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Imp
  • Publication date. Imperators II(Talk) 14:05, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Implement {{WizardsCite}}. Imperators II(Talk) 14:05, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 18:27, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
      • In the reference, too. And move what you have under Sources to Appearances and remove the Sources section. Imperators II(Talk) 08:45, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • What evidence is there for placing the subject in the Rise of the Empire era? Imperators II(Talk) 14:05, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • The supplement outright states that it takes place then. OtterSurf (talk) 18:37, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
      • That may be, but the article needs to provide in-universe reasoning for that in the body. Imperators II(Talk) 08:45, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
        • Having re-checked the supplement, it actually states that Head Trip can take place in any era, so I'm now not sure the eras field even applies. OtterSurf (talk) 09:22, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
        • Never mind, fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 11:51, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
          • What you have there right now makes no sense. The adventure is explicitly set in the Rise of the Empire era, which is set between 1000 BBY and 0 BBY, so you can work from that. Is the Galactic Republic mentioned as existing in the adventure? If so, that narrows it down to 1000 BBY and 19 BBY. I believe the Living Force Campaign Guide also establishes a date for the colonization of the Cularin system, so that can be used as another boundary for the date range. And then you should try and determine whether the adventure ties in any way with the events of the Living Force campaign, which may tie down the events to before, during, or after 31 BBY. Imperators II(Talk) 17:43, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
            • Just reread the supplement, and I quote: "Note that while Head Trip takes place in the setting established in The Living Force Campaign Guide, the events, places, and individuals in this adventure don't come from the RPGA's Living Force campaign. The Cularin system holds a wealth of possibilities for exciting adventures, and Gamemasters shouldn't feel constrained by the Living Force campaign when designing their own home games. Head Trip is an example of how to put your own spin on the setting". So does that mean the era field doesn't even apply here, or what? OtterSurf (talk) 18:27, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
              • It does apply. Per the first sentence you quoted, I believe we can safely assume that the events of the adventure take place concurrently with the events of the Living Force. Take the date from the Living Force Campaign Guide and use it with "around." Imperators II(Talk) 18:38, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
                • Great. Done. OtterSurf (talk) 18:43, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
                  • The current ref note erroneously uses 32 BBY, not 31 BBY, and it doesn't mention the adventure at all. Imperators II(Talk) 07:51, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • The Essential Atlas does not mention Genarius, please revise your referencing. Imperators II(Talk) 14:05, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • Corrected. OtterSurf (talk) 18:27, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
      • That is not what you had to do, OtterSurf. Take a look at the articles you've previously brought to status to see what needs to be put there. Imperators II(Talk) 08:45, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm seeing an error in the lead quote, so correct that and go through all the others and check them, too. Imperators II(Talk) 14:10, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Our article for the droid model is named incorrectly, that needs to be corrected. Imperators II(Talk) 14:10, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please split up the largest paragraph of the article and add an image. Imperators II(Talk) 14:12, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
    • Paragraph split. What image can I use, though? Head Trip doesn't provide any. OtterSurf (talk) 18:27, May 12, 2020 (UTC)
      • You can use images of related subjects from other sources. For example, we have an image of Genarius. Imperators II(Talk) 08:45, May 13, 2020 (UTC)
Shayanomer
  • If the Bimm are a furred species, then specifying this in the article for a single Bimm is unnecessary. It's like saying Chewbacca was a hairy Wookiee.
    • Bimms come in two flavours: furry and humanoid. I have removed a redundant mention of it, though. OtterSurf (talk) 11:23, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
  • Attire goes into Equipment, not P&T.
  • Reviewing note: Equipment always goes under the P&T, and below Skills if present. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 09:31, May 18, 2020 (UTC)
  • Species comes before gender. Please reflect this in the article. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 12:08, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • The intro can be expanded slightly with more details on the events surrounding the head.
    • Added info about the cantina fight. OtterSurf (talk) 12:43, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Does the source italicize "Falling Rodian"?
  • If a subject only has one appearance, then saying "first appeared" is unnecessary. See the recent EC meeting log for more details.
    • Done. Also reflected in the BTS. OtterSurf (talk) 12:31, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
      • Umm, you did not need to remove "1st" from Appearances, that was only for the BTS. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 12:47, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
  • Per precedent, you need to state that the article assumes the adventure plays out as described in the source. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 12:19, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
QGJ
  • Reference 2 provides a firm date for the adventure. This date is not present in the article itself. QuiGonJinn Senate seal.svg(Talk) 10:04, May 25, 2020 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Preliminaries:
    • Please implement an Oxford comma.
      • Done, I think. OtterSurf (talk) 15:54, June 8, 2020 (UTC)
        • No you haven't. Please take some time to research what an Oxford comma is and try again. The MoS would be a good place to start, although the first page of a google search of that term also explains it well.
          • I know what it is, thank you. I'm not sure where it applies here. I'll take another look. OtterSurf (talk) 08:58, June 9, 2020 (UTC)
          • Done. I've put it after "muzzle". OtterSurf (talk) 09:22, June 9, 2020 (UTC)
    • Please make the formatting of Head Trip consistent.
      • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 15:58, June 8, 2020 (UTC)
        • No you haven't. Sometimes it is italicised, sometimes it is in quotes. Which is correct? And I have no idea why you've removed the template from ref 2.
    • File links in the body should be formatted "file:name | thumb | location | size | caption."
      • Size? OtterSurf (talk) 15:54, June 8, 2020 (UTC)
        • Yes, that's what's missing. Please specify it.
    • Please implement — instead of —.
    • Watch out for formatting issues like double spaces. Tommy-Macaroni 18:11, June 6, 2020 (UTC)
      • I've been over the article with a fine tooth comb and can't find that. Where is it? OtterSurf (talk) 15:54, June 8, 2020 (UTC)
        • Yeah, I doubt that. You have two instances of double spaces in this article which can be easily found by using ctrl+f or your computer's equivalent. These are very simple objections Otter, they shouldn't be requiring this much effort from either of us. Tommy-Macaroni 22:04, June 8, 2020 (UTC)
          • I don't have that option available since I'm on an Android phone. This would move a lot faster if you just told me where the double spaces are. As above, I'll check again. OtterSurf (talk) 08:58, June 9, 2020 (UTC)
            • I appreciate the difficulty of you being on mobile, and that you may not have any choice in the matter, but I'm afraid this really isn't ideal for article nominations. I can see just from my previous objections here that you being on a phone has made addressing these far more difficult than they ought to be, and I'm afraid this will make nominations more lengthy and difficult for both you and reviewers. But regardless, while I could tell you were they are, that doesn't help you become a better writer for future projects. According to these two pages, a version of ctrl+f is available on android. Please do some research into this, as find text is an invaluable tool in article writing you really need to know how to perform. Tommy-Macaroni 12:02, June 9, 2020 (UTC)
              • Alright. Done that. Chrome tells me that there's only one double space in the article, but won't show me where it is. A visual scan of the marked page shows only single spaces. I'm starting to find this extremely frustrating. OtterSurf (talk) 12:43, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
                • Yeah don't get sassy with me, you chose to nominate this article on mobile and the restrictions that come with it, so you really shouldn't be surprised at the fact that you have to find ways to work around those restrictions. Now, I can assure you there are two instances of double spaces in the article. If Chrome isn't working properly, have you tried copy-pasting the contents of the article into another app, one with a better find text feature, or even better, a find and replace tool? I sympathise with the restrictions of mobile but, to be blunt, you don't seem to be trying very hard to find alternative solutions to those restrictions. You are a regular article nominator, so you knowing how to perform a text search is imperative. I can guarantee you will need to do so for future nominations. And yes, I could tell you where the double spaces are, that does nothing to help you as a writer. Self-sufficiency is a requirement of nominating, and it is not the job of reviewers to construct and modify articles for nominators who don't know how to or can't do it themselves. Your nomination is your responsibility. So, instead of complaining about my objection, please put some effort in and find a way for you to access a text search. Tommy-Macaroni 13:58, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
                  • Uh, I'm not getting sassy with you. Think you misread my comment. Anyway, I've run the text of the article through a double-space removal tool. All double spaces should be absent now. OtterSurf (talk) 15:35, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
  • There are at least two links that are not formatted properly.
    • Fixed. The Wizards one might still need doing, though. OtterSurf (talk) 15:38, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
      • Yes, there's another one in that Wizards reference note. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:48, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
        • I meant the WOTC pipelink. Fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 16:55, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
          • No, the one you've just changed was actually properly formatted before you changed it. I'm talking about the one in the reference note #2. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 17:27, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
            • Ah. Well, now it's fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 18:39, June 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • Please fix the placement of quotation marks in BTS, per this item of the Manual of Style: "Per standards of American English, double quotation marks (" ") should be used and the period (full stop), comma, question and exclamation marks should be within the quotation."
  • As far as I can see, Cularin system's criminal organization has its own article, which should be linked in this article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 14:33, June 11, 2020 (UTC)
Ecks
  • While the order is different, the wording is essentially identical in the intro and the body: "while going through a shipment of scrap, Ginder came across the head of an L8O-series protocol droid." vs "Ginder came across the head of an L8O-series protocol droid, L8O-RC, while going through a shipment of scrap" Can we get some variation here please?
  • Are all Bimms furred? If so, is it really necessary to emphasize him being furred in the intro and the bio? 1358 (Talk) 15:26, 23 January 2021 (UTC)
  • "And the some other guys start following me" The Bio quote doesn't appear to be right, is that a typo or should it come with a [sic]? 1358 (Talk) 10:43, 21 March 2021 (UTC),
    • No, I just missed out a letter. Fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 13:06, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • You should mention that the soldiers and thugs are rivals.
  • You should mention that the third group following Ginder was unbeknownst to him.
  • You should mention that Ginder belongs to the more mammalian of the Bimm races. MasterFredCommerce Guild.svg(talk) 17:18, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Both Bimm species are mammalian, so I'm not sure what you're asking for there. I've already stated in both intro and body that he was furred. OtterSurf (talk) 10:58, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
      • I'll be honest, I re-read the article, and I have no idea what this was about. I'll chalk it up to me reviewing it way past my bedtime and being slightly delirious. MasterFredCommerce Guild.svg(talk) 07:20, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
        • Heh, no problem mate. :D OtterSurf (talk) 12:45, 16 April 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Drolen Antig

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 09:45, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Smuggled a shipment of glitterstim through customs at Phindar Spaceport by hiding it up his backside, apparently

(0 ACs/2 Users/2 Total)

(Votes required: 3 AC vote(s) required to reach minimum. No additional votes required to pass, please consider reviewing another article.)

Support

  1. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:04, September 1, 2020 (UTC)
  2. You know, I read that Wanted by Cracken entry three times to figure out how I was missing that bit about Phindar. -- Darth Culator (Talk) 15:03, 14 February 2021 (UTC)

Object

Shayanomer
  • The intro is way too short for three paragraphs in the biography. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 17:40, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • Do the sources state that he smuggled goods on those smuggling routes? If so, then the info on both of those can be combined better in the biography. Otherwise, split them into two sentences.
  • In the first paragraph, is there a reason to use two separate Sources to cite the info about Pirik after citing "Outer Rim"?
    • Yes. Only Corint City is mentioned in Antig's profile; where it is, namely Pirik, is from another source. OtterSurf (talk) 10:19, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
      • Then you will need to include a note stating that the source identifies the planet that the city is on as Pirik. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 10:51, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
  • You need to elaborate on the "technology" when it's first mentioned in the second paragraph instead of the third paragraph, as you call it a "valuable resource," which isn't explained very well there.
  • "The criminals needed a transport, and so Antig offered his own ship, the Trustworthy, for the job." Please restructure this sentence to improve its flow.
  • His work with the Advosze thieves should be mentioned before the heist, as all information needs to be in chronological order.
  • "The heist was a success, but Antig and his crew killed the Advosze..." This is the first and only time you mention any sort of "crew" in the biography separate from the Advosze.
  • "New Republic forces were quick to act, attempting to locate Antig, who had been spotted in the Ethav Regions after the heist, and resolving to retrieve the stolen components before Kuat Drive Yards could use the technology in designs for the Empire." Please restructure this to reduce it's run-on nature.
  • "He was not entirely trusted by his crew of thirty fellow lowlifes and criminals, and had stolen his trousers from a Corellian." This information should be in the biography, especially the composition of his crew. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 13:47, July 6, 2020 (UTC)
    • Done. This fixed the objection above as well. OtterSurf (talk) 10:35, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
  • The trousers can be added to Equipment.
  • "He ran with a crew of thirty lowlifes and criminals, none of whom entirely trusted the Nalroni, and had stolen his trousers from a Corellian." This sounds like the crew stole his trousers. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 10:51, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
    • Yeah, I read that back and it read poorly. I moved the trousers to Equipment per the objection above. OtterSurf (talk) 11:09, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
      • The fact that he "stole" something at one point is biographical information. Keep that info there. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 11:13, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
        • Added. The fact that Antig wore the trousers is mentioned in Equipment so it feels less redundant. OtterSurf (talk) 11:36, July 9, 2020 (UTC)
  • I'm certain you can add an image of some kind to the Biography (i.e. the location of the heist). Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:08, August 31, 2020 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 09:40, September 1, 2020 (UTC)
      • Can you position it lower and increase the size? Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 14:05, September 1, 2020 (UTC)
Zed
  • If he was spotted in the Ethav Regions after the heist, this should be added to the Biography.
  • His starship should be mentioned in the Equipment section.
  • Is the attribution of quotes to Pash Cracken correct? Other articles related to "Wanted by Cracken" (such as Ethav Regions or "Wanted by Cracken" itself) attribute quotes to Airen Cracken. Zed42 (talk) 21:13, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
    • Done, done, corrected. OtterSurf (talk) 09:00, May 22, 2020 (UTC)
  • As per pages such as Ethav Regions, quote attribution should include the in-universe document, and Antig's mention in the datafile should be included on the page. Zed42 (talk) 10:58, May 22, 2020 (UTC)
Spooky
  • I think the year for the Empire's defeat at Endor can be included in the intro, along with context for Endor.
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 10:32, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
    • This goes for the context in the intro and the Biography - Endor is a moon; pretty well established. I really don't think 'world' is the best context descriptor for it when we can specify.—spookywillowwtalk 04:04, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
  • Endor, Relarr system, Roche asteroid field, and Corint City need context in the Biography.
  • I think the location of the Kuat Drive Yards should be established.
  • The introduction should state Antig's gender.
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 10:32, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
      • The gender should always go after the species.—spookywillowwtalk 04:04, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
        • Flows better the other way round if you ask me, but okay. Done. OtterSurf (talk) 08:08, May 26, 2020 (UTC)
          • It's precedent on every status article that ever was :P —spookywillowwtalk 00:15, June 3, 2020 (UTC)
  • In the first paragraph of the Biography, "32" should be written out as "thirty-two".
  • "...in his adult life, and was known to have worked" Who knew he had worked with?
  • Similar case here, "which were believed to have been lost in a struggle with one of the Advosze he murdered" Who believed/said they were lost in such a struggle?
    • Omitted and fixed respectively. OtterSurf (talk) 10:34, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
  • The P&T seems to have run-on sentences overall. I also think subjective language such as "apparently", from "...apparently stole his trousers", should be removed.—spookywillowwtalk 03:01, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
  • Preliminaries:
    • Files and templates need to use underscores in place of spaces (eg [[File:Luke_Skywalker.jpg]], not [[File:Luke Skywalker.jpg]]).
    • Multiple poorly-formatted links.
    • The {{Journal}} template should be implemented for issue 11 as well.
    • Aren't those Wanted by Cracken entries sources rather than "appearances"?
    • The italicization and quotations of the real-life "Wanted by Cracken" are inconsistent in the article.
    • Publisher information missing in BTS. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders.svg Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:49, June 13, 2020 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Does the source explicitly call his hair "orange-red"? Because the infobox image is anything but.
  • Why does Endor's astrographical position or status as a moon need to be mentioned here? Does this contain any relevance to the character? If it doesn't, just say "defeat at the Battle of Endor": "After the Galactic Empire's defeat at the Outer Rim moon of Endor"
  • Two consecutive sentences in the intro begin in the exact same way, which is redundant and poor wording. Please mix it up. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:28, September 28, 2020 (UTC)
    • Both done. OtterSurf (talk) 09:51, September 29, 2020 (UTC)
      • If you think changing "After" to "Following" is satisfactory, you're sadly missing the point of this objection. Please reword one of those sentences to avoid the redundant syntax. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:11, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
Imp
  • Okay, I wanted to review this, but it seems I need to pause right now since it's becoming very obvious to me that you haven't even bothered to include all the details from the source regarding the article's subject. I want you to go through the source again and add every detail concerning Drolen Antig. Imperators II(Talk) 11:43, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
    • There, that should be everything. I'll check over the source again though. Let me know if you think there's anything else missing. OtterSurf (talk) 12:23, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 13:30, 8 April 2021 (UTC)
      • I see you've added some stuff. Now please once again go through the source and add everything you're missing. Cracken's opinion of Antig, the precise details of the Kuat job (the article currently has at least one factual error), the details of his equipment, the author of the article, everything.
        • Added Cracken's opinion, will recheck the source to see where I went wrong, and I've added everything I can as far as I can see. OtterSurf (talk) 11:12, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
        • Could you be more specific about the factual error? OtterSurf (talk) 13:12, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
          • The article currently says the Advozse thieves were killed after Antig's ship landed, which is flat out wrong. Imperators II(Talk) 13:34, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Some of the info regarding Antig's equipment can't be sourced to the Journal 10 article.
    • I don't understand this one. Why not? OtterSurf (talk) 11:12, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Please add the location of the Ethav Regions.
  • I'm not seeing any reason not to treat the illustrator's depiction of Antig as canonical with respect to his fur color. Since the contradictory information comes from an in-universe source, that should be noted as an IU error. Imperators II(Talk) 11:41, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Per Star Wars Adventure Journal 1, the Wanted by Cracken entries published in the Journal are updates to the original Wanted by Cracken document, which was published three years after Endor, per Wanted by Cracken. Imperators II(Talk) 09:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Nope, I'm having trouble with that one. Where is that stated? OtterSurf (talk) 12:05, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
      • Every entry of the Wanted by Cracken series is from the document of the same name (stated at the top of every page), and in the very first sentence of the Journal 1 section talks about it being an update to the list of criminals that that document is. Imperators II(Talk) 12:24, 15 April 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Sami (Cantrosian)

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 09:57, July 22, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Missed the last objection, sorry. This kitty is going all the way!

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Object

Zed
  • {{Otheruses}} should be implemented.
  • Durne should be linked directly in the intro, rather than just being referred to indirectly.
  • The body images could be enlarged somewhat.
  • His generic traits (like his feline face and ears) don't need to be mentioned if they're something innate to his species.
  • The publication date issue raised here should also be addressed on this page. Zed42 (talk) 10:31, 24 February 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • This article is related to the Minka article you've also nominated for status. Please address all of my objections on that GAN here, as well. Imperators II(Talk) 11:45, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Can you please tell me the page on which The New Essential Chronology states the Battle of Endor took place in the beginning of 4 ABY? Imperators II(Talk) 12:06, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Page 124. OtterSurf (talk) 12:32, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
      • Right. No, that won't do. Obviously NEC doesn't list every event of 4 ABY. So just because the events of ROTJ are the earliest 4 ABY events noted in the book technically doesn't mean they occur at the beginning of that year. Imperators II(Talk) 13:16, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
Ayrehead
  • I'd move the stuff about Durne's intelligence saying that the opposing faction was loyal to the Empire up to the first paragraph of the body and mention Minka left to search for the nearest rebel base, then in the second paragraph you can explain that she was saved by the heroes after being shot down and brought them back. The current order is slightly confusing. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:38, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
  • In the last paragraph of the body I think you can go into more detail about Durne actually arriving at the base. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:38, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
  • You don't actually say anywhere in the body about Sami telling Minka to use stun. Ayrehead02 (talk) 18:38, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
    • All done. OtterSurf (talk) 11:03, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
      • I think you can move more of the Durne's intelligence stuff and that he's on an asteroid base up to the first paragraph. I'd clarify that the faction was in conflict with an opposing Cantrosian faction that they believed to be loyal to the Empire based Durne's intelligence reports. Then in the second paragraph you can specify that Minka was on a mission to seek aid against this faction, who then attacked her. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:24, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
  • You now skip Minka and the rebels arriving on the asteroid and actually meeting Sami for the first time. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:24, 19 April 2021 (UTC)

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Lothalian citizen assistance office

  • Nominated by: ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 17:48, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:
    • About 340 words.

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Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 11:46, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
  1. Immi Thrax RainbowRebellion2.png (talk) 06:02, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
  2. Good work, Impactic. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:07, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
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Shayanomer
  • Links have to be repeated between the infobox, intro, and main body. Please ensure the main body is fully linked.
    • Repeated the links from intro in the main body. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:11, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • The article has a Conjecture template, yet the article proper treats the name as if it's the actual title. Please rectify this. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 17:53, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
    • Removed occurrences where the name is used in that way. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:07, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
      • Still needs to be addressed for the intro. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 18:31, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
        • I removed the full name, but it still feels off. Any suggestions on how to write it within the intro? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:53, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
          • I have reworded the intro, please let me know if you are satisfied with this change. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 19:16, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
            • Looks good to me. As for the "instalment" vs "installment", "installment" is the American spelling and should be used over the other spelling, Right? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 19:19, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • People from Lothal are called "Lothalites," and as such any instances of "Lothalian citizens" should be modified.
  • Coruscant, Lothal, and Bartanish Four Sector (where is this one located?) need context.
    • I added context to Lothal and Coruscant. The Bartanish Four Sector has very little location information in the book, aside from the fact that its closer to the Federal District. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:57, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
      • Still missing in the intro and for Lothal. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 19:16, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
        • Aadded context in the Intro. What extra context is needed for Lothal? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 19:41, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • In formal writing, you refer to characters by their last names, not the first.
  • Category:Offices should be added. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 18:31, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Can you modify the opening quote's description so that it connects to the subject of the article better?
  • An image of Renking from the comic can be added to the article.
  • From reading the novel, it looks there should be a general article for "citizen assistance office," and thus should be linked in this article. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 19:16, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
    • Linked, but I'll have to create the page. I'll update once its done. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 19:52, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Please check these sources for a mention of the subject. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 06:32, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
    • Theres no mention of the office anywhere in the Rebels episodes or the junior novel. I also checked the other Thrawn books, and it isnt mentioned there either. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 16:40, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
      • Those are not the sources I asked you to check. I linked a specific section of the article that contained the sources to be investigated. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:44, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
        • Ah! Sorry! My computer cut those off the screen. I'll check them now. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 16:47, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
        • The women of the galaxy book mentions that she works for a senator on coruscant. Would that count as an indirect mention? I do not own the Ultimate Star Wars book, so I am unable to check that one. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 16:58, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
          • For Women of the Galaxy, not really. As for Ultimate Star Wars, one of the requirements for a nomination is a comprehensive list of sources, so you need to find someone who can check the book for you. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 17:02, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
            • Okay. sounds good. I'll consult the discord. In the meantime, is there anything else I can improve? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 17:38, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
            • Thanks to the help of Lewisr, I can say that the Ultimate Star Wars mentions an office, but doesn't specify whether it means this one or the one in Bartanish 4. It just says she accepted a job in the office, but was later fired. Should I put it down as a mention? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:26, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
              • That isn't specific enough, so no. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 18:35, 19 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Please introduce a paragraph break in History.
  • I see a new category redlink to be filled in: Category:Citizen assistance offices.
  • Error in the date note: You need to specify the earliest point at which the office existed, in this case it's 13 BBY. Right now you've stated that it was built by 11 BBY. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 17:55, 8 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Added a line break. As for the date, Thrawn takes begins somewhere between 13 BBY and 11 BBY. If the story took place in 11 BBY, then the office could have been built in 12 BBY. That's why a used the latest date, I'll switch it to 13 if you think it's necessary. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 21:02, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Created the category. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 21:27, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
      • The office could've been built at any point in time. Also, doesn't the chapter that mentions the office take place after a time skip since the novel is set over multiple years? If so, I don't actually see the need for the date note. You also have an unsourced paragraph. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 18:41, 13 February 2021 (UTC)
        • So just remove the mention of any date entirley? Arihnda was offered the job at the office before the time skip, so it was in existence by then. You've been editing a lot longer than me though, so I'll do what you think is best. Fixed the unsourced paragraph, do you think it needs another paragraph break? Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 03:11, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
          • The timeline of the novel is kept vague anyway, so a date note here involves speculation since you are assuming the office couldn't have been opened during the events of the novel. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 05:54, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
            • Okay. Sounds good. I removed the date notes, and any mentions of a date in the body. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 21:44, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Looking at the novel, I'm unable to find the part where it says Renking opened the office, only that he owned it during the events of the novel. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 10:23, 16 February 2021 (UTC)
  • You repeat info in the intro: "...tended specifically to the needs of Lothalites living there. [...] served to assist with the complaints and needs of the citizens."
  • I would combine third and fourth sentences together as their openings are repetitive.
  • Intro: "The office continued to run under a new overseer." Body: "The following week, the citizen assistance office was reopened with a new overseer.". These are saying two different things. Was it always open or did it temporarily close down?
  • Too many sentences in Description start with "The office." Please introduce some variation.
  • Since "Bartanish Four Sector supplementary citizen assistance office" is a conjectural title, I would avoid spelling out that name in the body. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 09:26, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Addressed all. I assume the "third and fourth sentences" you were referring to were in the intro? Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 18:43, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
  • I really think you should avoid two-sentence paragraphs and can merge them with others without them becoming too long. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 05:53, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • Audiobook for Thrawn will need to be added, and the Thrawn comic adaptation should be checked.
    • Do you mind if I chip in? The comic also has a "mention only", no new info.--Dionne Jinn (Something to say?) 18:23, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
    • I added the audiobook. In the comic, the office is mentioned in a flashback, but never appears. What template(s) should be used in that situation? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:24, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
      • You can use {{Mo}} next to {{Flash}}. Additionally, audiobooks should be formatted like this: [[Thrawn (audiobook)|''Thrawn'' audiobook]]
        • Done. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 18:50, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
          • Please use {{1stm}} for the book and audiobook, as they were first mentioned in both simultaneously, like this: (First mentioned, simultaneous with Thrawn audiobook), and vice versa next to the audiobook.
  • Introduction could be expanded.
  • Could a quote be added to the description section? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Conversation) 18:12, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
  • Some underlinking in the article body.JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Conversation) 19:08, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
    • I added 1 or 2 but I couldn't find any more to add. Any that stand out to you? ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 20:09, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
    • Added the links you mentioned. ImpacticForce Jedi Order.svg (Talk) 20:16, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
OOM
  • "and as such, was among the sprawling cityscape." The cityscape of what? The article should clarify that.
  • You should vary your wording; there's four instances of "located."
  • Everything in the body should be in past tense, so the word "would" should be removed from the article.
  • Lacking context for Lothalite; I think it would be best if the article uses the term when mentioning the five hundred citizens from Lothal.
  • Formatting:
    • <br /> (note the space between "r" and "/") should be used instead of <br>
    • For images and templates, spaces should be replaced by underscores (e.g. [[File:Luke_Skywalker.jpg]] instead of [[File:Luke Skywalker.jpg]]
  • There's no need for the full stop (period) in the History section's quote attribution; it's not a complete sentence. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:58, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Pryce's parents moving to Batonn is not relevant. What is relevant, however, is the fact that Elainye was released, since it ties into Pryce's deal and her working at the office.
  • The article should mention that the Bartanish Four office was newly opened due to a new program encouraging senators to set up and fund supplementary offices across Coruscant. I'd check the novel myself for further information like this, but I only have access to the limited preview function of Google Books. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:10, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
  • The article should also elaborate on Pryce's intention to work on Coruscant. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 13:02, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed. Does any specific point need more than I added? Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 15:49, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
      • Yes, I'd like you to include the information regarding the new program as I said above. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 21:10, 6 April 2021 (UTC)
        • Added. Also added the info discussed via discord. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 03:29, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Last thing: You can introduce some paragraph breaks for a better presentation. Ideally, a paragraph on Wookieepedia should have no more than about 5 lines OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 10:18, 13 April 2021 (UTC)
Imp
  • Right now, many sentences in History feel quite short and choppy to me. Please go through the section and try and connect them into slightly longer ones. (No need to go overboard, of course.) While you're at it, please also try to ease the "Renking did this. Renking did that. Renking did that again" situation going on in the third paragraph. Imperators II(Talk) 13:37, 15 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Combined and extended sentences. Does it still feel choppy? I tried to use a larger variety of ways to refer to Renking. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 02:57, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Reviewing note: Keep this in mind. Imperators II(Talk) 09:18, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
Tommy
  • Nice work with this! Just one little thing. You have the Empire in the office's affiliation in the infobox, but this isn't mentioned explicitly in the body. I'd like to see some mention of the office's relationship with the Empire in the description and perhaps the into. Maybe you could just say "Imperial Senator Domus Renking," but I'll leave it up to you. Tommy-Macaroni 12:38, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
    • I think that's the best way to incorporate it into the article. Added. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 16:11, 19 April 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Should the page be moved to Lothalite assistance office? Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 16:28, 12 January 2021 (UTC)

  • What's wrong with the current title? Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 12:41, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
    • Since citizens of Lothal are "Lothalites," it may be preferable to move it. It may be fine where it is, though. Jedi Order.svg ImpacticForce (Talk) 18:43, 15 January 2021 (UTC)
      • This one's up to you. Both demonyms are fine in my opinion. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 13:00, 16 January 2021 (UTC)


Redeemer

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  1. I personally can't find anything else after several reviews. Good work. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:55, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. You're just nomming this because the Separatists blew it up :P OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:39, 5 March 2021 (UTC)

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Shayanomer
  • For starters, the article should follow the precedent set by existing starship GAs. e.g. No manufacturer, reference note for length. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 17:51, 16 January 2021 (UTC)
  • It would be wise to investigate these sources for a potential mention of the ship (direct or indirect). Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 07:48, 23 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Objection handled via Discord. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:42, 24 February 2021 (UTC)
  • I don't see the purpose of explaining Ryloth's occupation in detail when it has no relation to the Redeemer. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 09:35, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
Editor
  • I feel like "and liberate Ryloth from the Separatist Alliance" is the wrong choice of words, due to Cham Syndulla's role in the Battle of Lessu. So I think something like "leading to the liberation...." would be better. You don't need to mention the Twi'lek resistance. I think change it to something that notes the liberation but doesn't attribute all of it to the Republic.--Editoronthewiki (talk) 20:26, 16 January 2021 (UTC)
Macaroni
Vitus
  • I think the ship's hangars can be added, as well as the bridge, and the medium twin laser cannons on the hull. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:27, 4 February 2021 (UTC)
    • While I will add the fact that hangars and the laser cannons are equipped to the Redeemer, I don't really see point in noting that the ship was equipped with a command bridge as other Venator nominations do not include those in their description section. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 20:40, 4 February 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • I think the article would benefit from another ref note for the Open Circle Fleet.
    • Thinking this over, there is no reason to add a ref note for it being affiliated with the fleet, primarily because it's the same as clone trooper armor markings and because there's a precedent that contests this per Tranquility/Legends, an FA. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 17:53, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Oh yeah, it has that Open Circle Fleet emblem.
  • The sentence in the intro's second paragraph is quite long. It should be broken up.
    • Is that good?
  • "long" in the Description section violates WP:NPOV.
    • Removed.
  • Context for the Clone Wars in the History section cannot be sourced to "Storm over Ryloth"
    • Is it fine to source it to TSWB? The "three-year-long" part at least. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 16:49, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Actually, there's no need to say that the Clone Wars lasted three years or that the Ryloth blockade happened after the outbreak of the Clone Wars. The article only needs to mention that the blockade took place in 22 BBY, during the Clone Wars fought between the Republic and the Separatists.
        • Removed.
  • Since the article refers to "the three Star Destroyers" and "four additional Munificents" later on, the total number of Venators and Separatist capital ships originally at the blockade battle should be mentioned first in the "Strike on the blockade" subsection. The other two Venator's names should also be first mentioned there.
    • Added the names of the other two in the second History paragraph.
      • I think it's also worth mentioning the number of Separatist ships at that point of the battle.
  • It would be better if you could mix up the vocabulary for the words "heavy" and "damage"
    • Changed "heavy" to "extensive" before the subsection in History.
  • {{Mediacat}} needed OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:04, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Added. Still rather confused on placement, though. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 13:48, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Per WP:LG#Mediacat, the template should be added under Appearances unless it interferes with the display of media titles, in which case it gets moved down until it no longer interferes with the presentation of media titles or reaches the Notes and references section. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 18:07, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  • The Description section can mention the Open Circle Fleet emblem on the ship.
  • Can you determine which SD in the first image of the article body is the Redeemer? If so, you should point it out in the caption. If not, the caption should be altered so as to maintain consistency of saying "the Defender and the Resolute" in that order.
  • I think Mar Tuuk's Lucrehulk is notable enough for an article.
  • {{Interlang}} should be in alphabetical order. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 08:42, 5 March 2021 (UTC)
Ecks
  • Please check the wording of references 3 and 4. Both contain a sentence that says "As this episode" but it's not at all clear which episode we're talking about. Please reword. 1358 (Talk) 16:05, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

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Rebel Friend

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  1. I hope there has to be a canon tab for this legend when Lego Skywalker Saga comes out. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 14:44, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:02, 25 March 2021 (UTC)

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CC-8
  • Missing links to Galactic Empire/Legends and Rebel trooper/Legends in the body
  • Needs some context for Darth Vader, specifically that he was leading the Imperial forces
  • This may be a silly but you could add that his helmet had a chin strap in the equipment section.
  • At the end of the Bts I'm not sure whether you're talking about the DS version of II or the Complete Saga, or if it's both. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 08:37, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
  • I've just watched some Youtube playthoughs of Lego Star Wars II on DS and I'm not seeing our guy turn up at all. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:34, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Should be the last thing, so when the player finds Rebel Friend there's this gap on the floor that can't be reached until the stormtroopers have been defeated, after which he pulls a switch to lower some platforms for Antilles and co to get past. I think that's important enough to be described in the article. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:19, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
DwartiiDelver
  • Minor suggestion, but perhaps instead of "Rebel Friend and the others in the group" in the introduction, you could write "Rebel Friend and his compatriots" or "his comrades" or something similar, just so it's not such a mouthful (not to mention slightly more clear).
  • For the final paragraph of the Biography, can it truly be said that the group "took care of all the foes they ran into"? Been a while since I've played the game myself, but upon watching footage of the level on YouTube it seems there are a at least a few stormtroopers at this part that aren't required to be defeated in order to progress, so I'm not sure it can be said that all the Imperials here were dealt with. DwartiiDelver (talk) 01:00, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Both fixed--there are indeed some troopers that don't try to attack them. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 01:06, 24 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Perhaps I'm mistaken about how we handle this sort of thing, but what I'm mainly getting at here is that I'm not sure it can be said that Rebel Friend and co. "took care of" all their foes here. While there are a number of Imperials near the end of the level that do need to be defeated in order to progress, after taking out these ones you technically don't have to kill any of the other stormtroopers that are past this door, even though they are shooting at you. It may be annoying to deal with, but it seems it's possible to simply walk past these guys and finish the level without even acknowledging them. As such, I don't believe we know if all the enemies here were actually taken care. DwartiiDelver (talk) 01:22, 24 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments

  • Is the screenshot from a cutscene, so no variability with the exact still popping up, or just from gameplay, in which it's possible to go through without recreating the exact frame? If the latter, not sure if it should be used in the IU portions. Also, I notice you talking about how the characters "took care of all the foes they ran into," so does that mean that all the enemies need to die in order to advance? If not, please reword to reflect the ambiguity of whether all Imperial enemies are killed. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 23:53, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
    • To be honest I didn't even think about where the image had to come from (I've never had a video game nom before)— the screenshot is not from a cutscene, so I'll look for a new one on that front. In terms of your second point, if the player tries to advance without killing the Imperials they run into, they'll be gunned down for sure, so yes, they do have to die in order to advance. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Conversation) 00:14, 1 February 2021 (UTC)
      • Thanks for responding to both. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 00:17, 1 February 2021 (UTC)
        • No problem, although I've run into a small issue—Rebel Friend does not appear in any cutscenes, only in-game story mode. Do you happen to know if I can still use it? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Conversation) 00:28, 1 February 2021 (UTC)
          • Perhaps you should replace that image with a screenshot from one of the cutscenes that precede the gameplay surrounding Rebel Friend, with an obvious accompanying caption change. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 01:15, 1 February 2021 (UTC)


Unidentified Jedi scout/Legends

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  1. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:59, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. ACvote.png A story I'm sure we'll one day see told. Ayrehead02 (talk) 19:11, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
  3. Great work. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:44, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

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Vuchelle system

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  1. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 02:20, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. ACvote.png Reviewed via irc. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:58, 30 March 2021 (UTC)

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Yuvern system

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  1. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 03:31, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
  2. ACvote.png Makes me think I should write up Cane Adiss sometime soon. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:09, 30 March 2021 (UTC)

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Faya Rodemos

  • Nominated by: DwartiiDelver (talk) 14:20, 21 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The first of the Four Sages

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  1. Good work OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 18:33, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. Yes, good work by DwartiiDelver, expert on the Dwartii Posse. Immi Thrax RainbowRebellion2.png (talk) 03:24, 9 April 2021 (UTC)
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Macaroni
  • Why do you say "supposed" in ref 6? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 03:37, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Due to the fact that the Sith were not actually destroyed at the end of the Jedi-Sith War. DwartiiDelver (talk) 18:27, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Have you investigated sources listed here for appearances or {{Po}}s? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 18:43, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
    • Yep, I went through the appearances and sources for Palpatine's office in search of anything pertaining to the Four Sages of Dwartii, and have updated each of their pages accordingly. DwartiiDelver (talk) 19:04, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Please add a {{DEFAULTSORT}}. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 19:17, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • (Reviewing note) Instead of just the first name, either full names or surnames should be provided in quote attributions, image captions, and the article body.
    • I had a feeling this would come up in an objection (apologies for the incoming wall of text). While I realize there is a standard procedure, I would like to somewhat dispute it in this instance (I'm happy to discuss this with an AgriCorps member as well), as I believe a case could be made for a potential exception here. To begin, since the Sages were first named in 2005, they have been exclusively referred to by what we now know to be their first names (with the exception of Galaxy's Edge, which I will discuss in a moment). So in any reference book or novel they happened to be mentioned in, Faya Rodemos was known simply as Faya, Yanjon Zelmar was known simply as Yanjon, and so on. Even in the canon 2014 novel Tarkin, Sidious comments on his statue of Sistros Nevet by referring to the Sage simply as "Sistros." Then of course, Galaxy's Edge opened in 2019 and it was revealed the Sages had surnames, with their full names given on boxes containing statuettes of them. Despite this, the plaques listing the product name and price still list the Sages simply by their first names (so while the box says "Braata Danlos and Faya Rodemos," the price plaque simply says "Braata and Faya"). This isn't a hill I'm willing to die on, but I certainly do feel it's at least worth discussing.
      • I understand that the sources mainly just use "Faya," but consider subjects like Galactic Republic, Galactic Civil War, and Din Djarin, which are also not commonly referred to as such in many sources. Articles would typically write out the full, formal name, e.g. "Din Djarin," even if the source referenced does not use that name and/or uses another term; articles shouldn't be constrained by the exact wording used in source materials. It's okay if a sentence says "Faya Rodemos" when it's sourced to something that only uses "Faya." And since it's fine to do so, it should be done for formality. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:42, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
        • Updated accordingly.
  • (Reviewing note) Per WP:DASH, the hyphen should be used instead of an en dash when joining together two words or more (with exceptions as laid out in the policy) In this case, I've removed the en dash between "philosopher" and "lawgivers" per that policy.
    • Thanks—I had used the en dash as I thought that's what the original source had used, though upon checking it again I see I was mistaken.
  • The article would benefit from enlarging the images a bit.
    • Enlarged both. Look all right now, or would you like them bigger still?
  • Context for Gavin Bocquet
    • Added.
  • Please categorise the article (through Category:Four Sages of Dwartii where possible) for Faya's occupation as a lawgiver and affiliation to the Republic.
  • Did you check {{Episode III multimedia}} for any possible appearances/mentions? Of particular interest is that there's a lot of behind the scenes information for Episode III. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 10:24, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
    • I have, yes. The Making of book has an on-set photo of Faya's statue, although it doesn't discuss it in the text so there is no new info to add, and I can't list it in the Sources section as it's from the pre Disney canon era. DwartiiDelver (talk) 16:18, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Does the source say "Gert [Stevens] did two new statues" or simply "Gert did two new statues"? It's fine if it's the former, but if it's the latter, the square brackets should not be italicised. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:42, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
    • The latter—I've now un-italicized the brackets. DwartiiDelver (talk) 18:08, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • The Equipment section seems rather unnecessary for this article. It would be better just to integrate mention of the hooded robe of the status into the Biography. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:20, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Removed Equipment and added info to the Biography. DwartiiDelver (talk) 21:16, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Objection(s) overridden by AgriCorps 19:30, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Fred strikes back
  • In the intro..."A thousand years later..." Later than what? MasterFredCommerce Guild.svg(talk) 06:11, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Does that work, or should I throw an actual date into the intro? DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:05, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
      • I'd keep the prose the same but pipelink the date instead of Millennium. MasterFredCommerce Guild.svg(talk) 20:14, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
        • Done. I included "after" in the link as well, although I can take it back out if you think that'd be better. DwartiiDelver (talk) 03:11, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

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Budhila Hestilic Amura

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  1. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 13:05, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. Who knew there could be Hutt philosophers? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:09, 12 April 2021 (UTC)

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Attack on Chewbacca's camp

  • Nominated by: Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:42, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Lets see if I can complete my long held sporadic efforts to write up every article from the Galactic Battlegrounds campaigns.

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  1. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:23, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. DwartiiDelver (talk) 21:29, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
  3. Chewbacca and Obi-Wan: always a winning combination OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:33, 5 April 2021 (UTC)
    • I imagine their conversation in the Mos Eisley Cantina went something like "Holy shit, I remember you from that time we found a holocron, that was rad!" Commander Code-8 Hello There! 10:22, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

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OOM
  • Since both Battle Droid Beta Version and the beetle droid are B1 battle droids, the links to droid and battle droid in the infobox, intro, and the article body should be changed to B1 battle droid.
  • Did LUH hold the rank of commander? If not, the links to Commander/Legends should be changed to Commanding officer/Legends.
    • No rank is given in the game, so changed.
  • What did LUH do during the attack? OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 22:13, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
    • LUH-989 is just the name thrown in for the leader of the Trade Federation in the level, so the most that can be said is that he was leading the droids here. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 12:06, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Since LUH wasn't at the scene of attack, can you say that she (LUH is the female protagonist in THX 1138) commanded the droids remotely? OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 12:33, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
  • "Although" is preferred over "though" in formal writing.
    • Okay
  • "the player has four combat ready units, Chewbacca, two troopers and a mounted trooper" If I'm reading this correctly, are you trying to say that Chewbacca and the three other troopers constitute the "four combat ready units"? It's not very clear, has two items that are both called troopers—one of them is specified to be mounted whereas the other has no specification—and lacks an Oxford comma.
    • Is that clearer? I've changed the wording to refer to the more specific type of troops that are in the game.
  • The article says the attack also affected Shoran's camp, which makes me think the title "attack on Chewbacca's camp" should be changed to something more accurate. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:10, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
    • The only information about how Shoran's camp was affected is that he asked for resources to recover, as shown in the quote in the aftermath section. So if he needed to recover it's reasonable to claim that he was affected, but it would be going beyond what the game actually says about it to claim that he was actually attacked, which is what changing the title to something like "Attack on Chewbacca and Shoran's camps" would do. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:40, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Last thing: I think it's worth mentioning the result of the war in the intro OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:17, 5 April 2021 (UTC)

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  • That useless scroll bar appeared after I made the nomination, anyone know what's causing it? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:53, 28 February 2021 (UTC)


TK-7

  • Nominated by: Zed42 (talk) 08:56, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: TK-7 would make a good status review board member.

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  1. Not sure about having a droid-stormtrooper hybrid. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 18:25, 15 March 2021 (UTC)

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Maelstrom-class battle cruiser

  • Nominated by: --Vitus InfinitusTalk 23:47, 28 February 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Really wish there was no space in battle cruiser.

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Shayanomer
  • Please split up the opening sentence of the intro.
  • I am unable to see why Ref 2 needs to mention the Venator at all.
    • It's to ascertain a length for the Maelstrom. The Venator and the Acclamator are the only capital ships of the Republic that we know the size for, and the Venator is larger. Since they were both active in the onset of the war, and the Maelstrom was introduced at that time and said to be the biggest, my goal with the ref note was to explain that it would be larger than the length of the Venator.
      • All I'm able to gather from this note is: "Venator exists, so Maelstrom must be bigger than Venator." Why the Venator specifically? The ref note does a very poor job of answering that question. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
        • I reworded the ref. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:14, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
          • Unfortunately, I still don't see what the purpose is of introducing the Venator there. The question above is not satisfied. I would suggest removing this note entirely. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 06:53, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
            • I respectfully disagree, the reference note provides the length of the Maelstrom. Essentially, the Venator and the Maelstrom served at the same time and the Maelstrom was said to be the larger ship, then the Maelstrom must be larger than the Venator's length. Is there a way to reword the ref note to satisfy the objection? The information is perfectly relevant. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 07:01, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
              • I'll discuss with the ACs to see what can be done. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 07:13, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
                • Thank you, I really appreciate it! --Vitus InfinitusTalk 07:17, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
                  • After discussing with Tommy on IRC, we agreed that the note should state that both of them were capital ships in the Navy, so that a direct relation is established between the two ships. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 09:15, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
                    • Done. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:34, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
                      • The way the note is written currently implies that the Maelstrom being longer comes from Complete Vehicles. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 05:52, 3 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Rewrote the ref note. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 20:59, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Erroneous grammar: "The Maelstroms were designed as much to inspire awe in allies as they were fear in enemies."
  • Considered by whom? "The cruisers were considered to be massive and imposing..."
    • Source doesn't specify. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:25, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Then reword it. It's speculative wording unless it's explicitly made clear in the source. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
        • The source uses those words, I meant that the source doesn't specify who said so. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:14, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  • You don't need to italicize "Maelstrom" on its own, this convention only applies to the ship class (Maelstrom-class).
  • I'm seeing partially linked proper compound nouns in the article, going against the Manual of Style. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:02, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Okay, I think I got them all, but I'll continue reviewing to see if I missed any. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 19:25, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Nope, you didn't get any of them. Please consult the Manual of Style to find what you need to remove. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Please break up the Armament paragraph. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Please avoid using words like "impressive," "staggering," and "innovative," this falls under NPOV.
    • These words are also from the source. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 00:10, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
      • We wouldn't write "The Republic are the good guys" just because a source says so, that's the purpose of the policy. In this example, the design may be impressive and innovative to the Republic but not to the Separatists. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 06:33, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
        • Fixed wording. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 18:53, 14 March 2021 (UTC)
          • Does the source use this wording?: "...considered to be the most impressive..." Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 09:06, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
            • Not specifically, simply the "most impressive" part. I understand NPOV, however, in this case I believe the wording is appropriate as it presents a critical understanding of the design of the vessel. If you'd like for me to remove it, however, I can go ahead and do so. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 13:57, 26 March 2021 (UTC)
              • It's subjective, so I would appreciate some rewording. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 15:22, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
                • Lead by Example does use the wording "Maelstroms were the largest, and arguably most impressive, vessels in the Republic Navy". So what would you like done? CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 15:28, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
                  • Except for "impressive," the examples I pointed out above and any more you find in the article. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:09, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
  • "Deflector shield generator" in infobox-exclusive. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 08:37, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
Erebus
  • Don't know if this is what Shayanomer was implying above, but is it necessary to state that the Venator was a ship of the Republic Navy in ref 2? Doesn't seem relevant to the Maelstrom. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 20:36, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
    • I tried clearing up the reference note. What I essentially want to say is that since the Maelstrom served at X time, and was the largest Republic ship at that time, then it must be larger than 1,137 meters since the Venator also served at X time. The Venator is the largest Republic ship we have a length for. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 22:23, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
      • The ref note looks better in my opinion, however, that sentence looks like you're saying, "Oh, by the way, the Venator is here, too." If you can't reword it, then I'd recommend removing it because it's not relevant to the topic. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 22:31, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Welcome back, kept it warm for you. Anyway, I think you could add a date for the Clone Wars' onset. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 00:31, 3 April 2021 (UTC)

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  • I am taking a temporary personal leave from the site for the sake of my personal health and happiness, and I expect to return anywhere from one week to several weeks. --Vitus InfinitusTalk 14:41, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Just a heads up, I'll be handling any further objections for this nomination. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 15:12, 28 March 2021 (UTC)
  • I want to start of with a huge thanks to Erebus who took care of things during my absence. I have returned and ready for more objections :P --Vitus InfinitusTalk 21:51, 2 April 2021 (UTC)


Regulation manuals

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  1. They're more like guidelines than rules. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 02:56, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
  2. Get ready for Echo to reference these things in every single episode of Bad Batch DwartiiDelver (talk) 15:18, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

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CC-8
  • Shouldn't the article title be at "Reg manuals" and have a {{Nickname}} template? Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:11, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
    • "regulation manual" is more formal, and the episode guides use that full term. "Clone trooper regulation manual" is just to clarify what it is--Editoronthewiki (talk) 12:17, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
      • Ah okay, so maybe an "As reg manuals" or "as regulation manuals" could be noted in the appearances and sources sections. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 14:33, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
        • I believe we avoid doing that now--Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:25, 7 April 2021 (UTC)
          • Discussed on discord. "Reg manuals" is okay as an alt name, "regulation manuals" is okay as page title--Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:27, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
Shayanomer

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Vall Kumauri

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Dagobah Slug Slinger

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  1. insert memorable one-liner here Editoronthewiki (talk) 15:36, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

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Macaroni

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Just a heads up, I'll be handling any further objections for this nomination. MasterFredCommerce Guild.svg(talk) 04:55, 28 March 2021 (UTC)

  • Slinging Fred around like I'm a swamp slug. (Thank you again!) Immi Thrax (talk) 06:50, 3 April 2021 (UTC)


Atrisi system

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  1. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 00:57, 27 March 2021 (UTC)

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Jedi temple (Alaris Prime)

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Dwartii
  • Was the holocron actually found in Shoran's camp, or simply nearby? I see Qui-Gon, in his quote used over on the Jedi holocron (Alaris Prime) page, says it was found "near [Shoran's] camp." Or does the game actually show the holocron as inside Shoran's camp, in spite of what Qui-Gon says? DwartiiDelver (talk) 03:19, 17 April 2021 (UTC)
    • It's the latter. The holocron isn't close to any of Shoran's actual buildings which may be what Qui-Gon is referring to, but it's still within the walls of his camp. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:13, 17 April 2021 (UTC)

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Infantry Support Platform

  • Nominated by: CanePlayz (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I was too busy to handle the objections on the last nomination (here) in time, so here we go again. Everything left open from the last nomination has been addressed.

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OOM
  • Good work handling the objections from last time. Note that the context for the Clone Wars is currently exclusive to the article introduction. Like the infobox, everything in the introduction should also be mentioned in the article body. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 14:21, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Information is in the article body as well now. I didn't put the participating parties in there because they are already mentioned in that exact same sentence and still having them in the conext would have made it sound confusing and weird. CanePlayz (talk) 14:28, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
  • (Reviewing note: see here) Per WP:MOS, Wookieepedia uses Oxford commas, which means a comma should be added before "and" when listing more than two things.
    • Yeah, I was made aware of that with my Purrgil nomination just some days ago, thanks for letting me know. CanePlayz (talk) 01:53, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Context (and link) needed for clones in the history section. I think a pipelink to clone trooper would be the most appropiate here.
  • Mentioning the Mid Rim is uneccessary and probably cannot be sourced to Episode III.
    • Mentioning it was one of the objections on the old nomination, so we might have to talk a bit more about that. CanePlayz (talk) 01:53, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
      • Removed it now, your explanation on Discord makes sense. CanePlayz (talk) 14:01, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
  • The article is quite lacking in links. I've already added three links in the Role section, but you should check the article to see if there's any more subjects to be linked to, such as planet, Wookiee, and droid.
    • I've looked through it again and found 4 new things I've linked to. CanePlayz (talk) 14:01, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
  • "They were present on the Outer Rim planet of Felucia when Order 66, an order identifying all Jedi as traitors to the Galactic Republic, was issued by Supreme Chancellor Sheev Palpatine." I don't think this is necessary. The previous sentence already covers the Battle of Felucia, which includes the execution of Order 66.
    • Now that I think about it, I think I can agree with you on that, removed that sentence. CanePlayz (talk) 01:53, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
  • The full name of a subject should be used in the first line of the BTS section.
  • The last sentence in the BTS could use some links to Wikipedia. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 08:03, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
  • "considered a lighter variant of the ISP" Does the source specify considered by whom?
    • The source says "A lighter variant of this model was the [...] BARC." So yeah, it's not really considered that way by anyone in-universe but rather n general and I think it would make sense to change the wording here and get away from the "considered", right? CanePlayz (talk) 21:24, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
  • The second paragraph of Characteristics should be split into two for readability.
  • "The unique turbofan could be reversed to provide a sudden stop and produced less noise than most ion thrusters"
    • Is unique really needed here? If so, it should be mentioned alongside the first instance of turbofan in the article.
      • The source explicitly has a heading calling it "Unique Turbofan," so I think it should be included and added it to the other instances of the turbofan in the server. CanePlayz (talk) 21:24, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Is the turbofan an ion thruster? If so, the article should make that connection explicitly.
      • In the sources, that connection is never clearly made. CanePlayz (talk) 21:24, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Also, is the sentence here saying that the noise produced from making a sudden stop is less than that of most ion thrusters?
      • Nope, the general noise. CanePlayz (talk) 21:24, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Regarding "The speeders were especially strong in the fight against the," would "The speeders were especially strong when fighting against the" be more appropiate and accurate to the source here?
    • Not too sure, the source says "The front-mounted pair of twin blaster cannons are ltheal to enemy infantry, but can also prove highly effective against shielded enemy gunships, and Corporate Alliance Nr-N99 tank droids". CanePlayz (talk) 21:24, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
      • It would be more appropiate and accurate in this instance. The use of the word "the" before "fight" suggests that there was a specific fight when what you're wanting to say here is that the speeders do well against those droid tanks in general. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 21:44, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
  • A little bit of context for the NR-N99 Persuader-class droid enforcer would be nice. Was it a space station? A ship? (I know it's neither but it gets the point across :P) OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 06:59, 3 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Yes, I get the point. :P Added. CanePlayz (talk) 21:24, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

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As mentioned on the old nomination: I might be able to get an image for the characteristics section, but that is a different and complicated affair that has to be solved first. CanePlayz (talk) 14:11, 9 March 2021 (UTC)


Zett Jukassa

  • Nominated by: JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 19:19, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I planned on this nom being Shollan, but he got ShoLong that he'll have to be an FAN.

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Fan
  • I don't think the bit about Organa's nightmares is neccesary intro material.
  • Grand Army of the Republic is double-linked in the body.
  • "Though a young Jedi at the time of Order 66, Zett Jukassa heroically fought back against the clone troopers who invaded the Jedi Temple." Does any source use the word "heroically" or a symonym? Fan26 (Talk) 02:23, 30 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Coruscant is currently not mentioned in the body.
  • ID Raada as being in the Outer Rim Fan26 (Talk) 01:07, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
Shayanomer
  • Images can be enlarged.
  • Bail's reaction to his death can be included as a quote in the body.
  • Can anything from Ahsoka be used as a quote as well?
    • Nope.
  • BTS can use an image of Jett.
  • This source should be investigated for filming information. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 07:00, 3 April 2021 (UTC)
Zed
  • The intro and body contain conflicting accounts of who Jukassa was killed by.
    • Slaps face. Done.
  • The way that the intro is worded makes it appear as if the Jedi Archives and Jedi Temple were different places. The context for the Temple and Coruscant should be moved to the first mention of Jukassa's location.
    • Done.
  • I'm not sure that you can source "Born in the waning years of the Galactic Republic" to the Databank entry.
    • Removed.
      • Despite this, I do think it would still be worth mentioning the general timeframe during which he was a Jedi ("the time of the Galactic Republic" or something) rather than just "at some point". Zed42 (talk) 11:12, 18 April 2021 (UTC)
        • Added.
  • The body doesn't include a mention of the fact that his AOTC appearance took place in the Archives at all, and first mentions the Temple when Jukassa is fleeing from it without establishing what or where it is.
    • Whoops, fixed.
  • The Organa information in the final sentence of "Life as a Jedi" should probably be split into a new sentence; that way, you can provide a little more context for why Organa was there.
    • Split.
  • The Equipment section can elaborate on the color of his lightsaber and robes.
    • Added.
  • "Around twenty takes of the scene were shot." Which scene does this refer to? If it's a different scene from the Kenobi encounter previously mentioned, that should be specified. Zed42 (talk) 02:57, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Indeed referring to the Kenobi scene. Geez, I don't know how Ayre does film noms so easily. :P Thanks for the review! JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 06:47, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
  • The intro should mention something about the temple specifically coming under attack during 66, to give more context to why he was fleeing it.
    • Added.
  • Can "Core Worlds" as context for Coruscant be sourced to AOTC? Zed42 (talk) 11:12, 18 April 2021 (UTC)

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Ilimardon

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Hirodin Nasli (Redux review)

  • Redux comments: Reduxed at Meeting 138.
  • Date added: March 15, 2021

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Boiler rifle (Redux review)

  • Redux comments: Reduxed at Meeting 138.
  • Date added: March 15, 2021

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Haash'n

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  1. Reviewing this made me discover that Dressellians were part of the Home One briefing. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 14:48, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

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OOM
  • Major is intro-exclusive.
  • In reply to your reply on the CAN page, that is not the order in which the Alliance leaders spoke.
    • Feel free to call me an idiot on that one :P.
      • This objection and the one about Humans below just goes to show how obsessed with Mon Calamari you are :P
  • I don't see how the context for Home One being Ackbar's flagship is necessary.
  • You should also mention that Humans, not just Mon Calamari, stood behind the Alliance leaders. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 23:18, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Linking: Galactic Emperor/Legends should be used instead of Emperor/Legends, and missing links for Admiral Ackbar.
  • Flagship, Alliance Fleet are infobox/intro-exclusive, and Alliance High Command/Legends link is intro-exclusive.
  • You should replace the infobox image with a higher quality one by cropping the image in the article body. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 23:39, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed links, the Ackbar one was left from when I removed the bit about it being his flagship. If the image is still not to your liking, let me know so I can ask someone else to help me with it. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 02:47, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
  • CSWE only says Haash'n's homeworld was subjugated. I think saying that Dac was his homeworld is a reasonable assumption, but the name "Dac" need another reference note. Also, one's homeworld is not necessarily one's place of birth.
    • Updated the refs.
      • The ref note doesn't say that Dac was a planet, or that Haash'n was born on his homeworld, yet it's used to cite "Haash'n was born on the […] planet Dac." As I said earlier, one's homeworld is not necessarily one's place of birth. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:56, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
        • Fixed.
  • The card doesn't say that Haash'n was part of the Alliance Fleet.
    • I think that it's reasonable to assume that seeing as it says he piloted Star Cruisers, he was affiliated with the fleet of those cruisers. I also think it's reasonable to assume that the Star Cruisers it discusses are of the Rebel fleet. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 03:57, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
  • You could probably shorten the article body by ten, twenty words, which would bring the body's word count below 165. This means the introduction should be removed, and the behind the scenes would not be counted as part of the word count. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:54, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
Hanzo
  • I feel like his dream of piloting starships & goal of piloting Star Cruisers should just be in personality and traits. As is, you pretty much repeated the dream in both biography & personality and traits section. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 01:26, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Fixed. Also, I can't promise an AC won't want me to move the species and gender info back. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 01:29, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Please specify in the intro that he was on Home One during the Endor battle. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 15:51, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
Shayanomer
  • Can you specify that Haash'n served the Alliance as a major instead of introducing his rank with no context in the body?
    • Done.
  • Isn't an individual holding the rank of major an officer to begin with? If so, it's redundant to say he served as an officer after introducing his rank.
  • Reviewing note: Species comes before gender.
  • Reviewing note: Please spell out the full name of a character instead of just the last name on the first linking instance. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 15:51, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
  • WhatLinksHere shows me a source not listed here, The Rebel Alliance Scrapbook. You also need to investigate all sources that depict Home One's interior for any pictures of the character. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:59, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
    • Added, and found one more {{Po}}. I've checked the sources list of several status articles on the Home One in VI, and the only other thing that I need to check is Behind the Magic. JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 17:58, 21 March 2021 (UTC)

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Magva Yarro

  • Nominated by: Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:03, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Discovered the actress by complete chance while working through missing archive links.

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  1. Imagine adding a duplicate link in your copy-edit. :P JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 16:51, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
  2. CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 13:44, 7 April 2021 (UTC)

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Macaroni
  • Can a quote be added to the tweet ref? JediMasterMacaroniAdmiral Ackbar RH.png(Talk) 16:01, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
    • I chose not to add it as I didn't see the content as relevant. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 16:34, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Erebus
  • Not sure if this could be considered a sofixit, but would it be worth mentioning that Rogue One was an Anthology film? CIS roundel.svg Erebus Chronus (talk) 03:56, 7 April 2021 (UTC)

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  • Things I want to clear up:
    • A higher quality infobox image is not available.
    • I assumed that the U-wing card depicts Jedha as the Rogue One guide establishes that the Cavern Angels operated out of that location.
    • Couldn't find anything in supplementary material (e.g. trailers, magazines) for the film. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 20:03, 17 March 2021 (UTC)


Watcher Izax

  • Nominated by: Biggestleo (Talk) 17:19, 25 March 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Exceeded CAN by a bit

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  1. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 11:05, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

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Fan
  • There's room enough in the body for a related image, perhaps of Cap'n Frem or a generic pic of the Knights. Fan26 (Talk) 02:16, 30 March 2021 (UTC)
Shayanomer
  • His skills as a spy can go into a separate "Skills and abilities" section. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 10:46, 5 April 2021 (UTC)
OOM
  • I've got to say I'm very pleased to see a nom with the Eternal Empire infobox and with information from ambient conversation. Regarding the latter, however, you should be using the TORcite format here.
  • "Many years prior to 3630 BBY" is not supported by the ref note since the ref doesn't use the word "many."
  • "He got his code name from the god Izax" this cannot sourced to the Codex entry for the Zakuulan gods, and I'm thinking that this might be speculation. It would be better if you can word it to the effect of: "He shared his codename with the god Izax"
  • "on the planet Zakuul" could use some context here to point out to readers unfamiliar with TOR that Zakuul was the capital of the Eternal Empire. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:28, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
    • We were really lacking in the KOTFE+ department so I decided to do something about it :). I've added the changes as well. Biggestleo (Talk) 08:50, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
  • "sleeper agent" is intro-exclusive OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 09:19, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

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Isiring

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Blackback

  • Nominated by: VergenceScatter (talk) 20:52, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:Follow-up to Tayan falcon. Length is currently at 280 words, so just barely long enough for a GAN

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Erebus
Zed
  • "Majestic" feels a bit non–neutral viewpoint to me.
  • "However, because the birds were seen as valuable hunting trophies, they were nearly hunted to hundreds of years before the Galactic Civil War." I presume this is meant to read "nearly hunted to extinction" or something to that effect? Zed42 (talk) 09:48, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
  • I think the intro could do with noting why they were well-protected.
    • Done.
  • Is the "elusive" in the intro in reference to their low number, or something behaviour-related? Either way, it should be referenced in the body somehow. Zed42 (talk) 22:10, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Strongholds just states that they are elusive. It doesn't give a reason. VergenceScatter (talk) 22:30, 10 April 2021 (UTC)
      • I see. In that case, I think it should be mentioned in the Behavior section, as it's more indicative of that rather than their biology. Zed42 (talk) 04:40, 11 April 2021 (UTC)
  • You should change up your opening sentences a little so that the intro and first two sections don't all begin with the same "Blackbacks were" structure. Zed42 (talk) 04:40, 11 April 2021 (UTC)

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Imberlin sector

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Unidentified Zeltron

  • Nominated by: Liverpool92Ackbar HS.jpg 19:57, 12 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Was CAN became to big so now it's a GAN.

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OOM

Per Imp's objection on the CAN, you should make a clear, direct connection between the events of the comic and the reasoning in this template. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 10:32, 13 April 2021 (UTC)

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Onoam

  • Nominated by: Minnabird (talk) 05:02, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

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Erebus
  • Welcome to the GAN! First off, there are a few things I noticed missing from the article. Said on the Discord I would put them here as well:
    • Date note for 22 BBY in the first History paragraph
    • Reference notes for the ends of 3 paragraphs in the Vein of corruption subsection
    • "Considered severe enough" — considered by whom?
    • Since there is more than one source it is mentioned or appears in, the BTS should say "Onoam first appears [...]" Erebus Chronus (Talk) 05:22, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Forgot to add these two: the moon's grid coordinates as well as its location in the system and sector are not documented in the body anywhere and only the infobox. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 05:26, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
      • This also exclusive to the intro.
        • There should now be references for these in the description section Minnabird (talk) 14:59, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
          • It's in the description, but not the intro. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 15:17, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
            • I took cues from a confirmed GA featuring a moon with known grid coordinates, Leesis, in rewording the intro. Can you let me know if that satisfies, or if I should incorporate the exact grid coordinates there, too? Minnabird (talk) 00:37, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
  • "Onoam's relationship with Naboo had long been strained" — Any reason as to how, and is "long" from you or the source?
    • "Long" is all my source gives me. I'll add detail about the source of the strain (Naboo rule vs mining quotas). Minnabird (talk) 14:59, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
      • Did some restructuring. Would welcome feedback on whether it's clearer. Minnabird (talk) 00:37, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
        • Just wondering, is the second sentence in the CW-era a continuation of the first sentence? Because if so, I wonder if you could merge them together to create one sentence, since the second seems like a run-on. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 01:15, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
          • "Onoam had a long history of tension with Naboo,[3] and the mining moons of Naboo found their loyalties torn between the rule of Naboo and their need to meet production quotas."? I'm trying to both transition between two sources and rephrase a sentence that packs a lot of ideas into it—that there's an unsteady equilibrium between economic drivers and Naboo's standards; that these are specifically opposed loyalties. (Original sentence from QS: "Unlike the mining moons, which struggled to maintain the balance between the rule of Naboo and their allegiance to filling their quotas, Karlinus was a place where prosperity began.") Minnabird (talk) 01:35, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
  • In veins of corruption, you should state at the beginning of the first paragraph that this was during the Empire's reign. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 14:51, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
  • In History, there's no context as to who Leia is.
  • (Reviewing note) Please be careful of underlinking. Erebus Chronus (Talk) 16:26, 14 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Definitely a big blind spot for me. I've linked everything I can think of - and revisited the rules and realized I needed to be linking for the first mention in intro AND body - but later paragraphs are looking a little sparse. Minnabird (talk) 00:38, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Vergence
  • It's been a while since I've read the source, but I believe that instead of linking to mine in the intro you should link to Onoam mine.
  • The Onoam spaceport should be mentioned in the body.
    • Done (in description). Minnabird (talk) 05:05, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
  • I would rewrite the sentence "Many wealthy citizens of Naboo had second homes on Onoam, including the sector governor Quarsh Panaka's chalet and a home owned by Queen Dalné." Currently the first clause focuses on the citizens, while the second focuses on the houses themselves. VergenceScatter (talk) 04:19, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
    • Let me know how that looks? Minnabird (talk) 05:05, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Shayanomer
  • Something weird is going on here: "Its grassy plains housed second homes for wealthy citizens of Naboo, while underground, miners extracted medicinal spice."
  • Something weird is also going on with Ref 9. Shayanomer Din Djarin's clan.svg (talk) 15:30, 17 April 2021 (UTC)

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Chewbacca's camp

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Kalki Nebula/Legends

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