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Garth Breise

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 12:32, June 22, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Let's do it this time!

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 07:14, July 16, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa
Anil
  • Breise seems important to Yomin Carr's history. Have you checked the Sources of the latter's article for possible mentions of Breise? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:01, June 28, 2019 (UTC)
    • Yep. No other mentions. OtterSurf (talk) 07:52, June 28, 2019 (UTC)
  • Could you please show me the exact passage from The Essential Reader's Companion that includes the indirect mention of Breise, as suggested in the Sources? I can't seem to find it myself. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 00:18, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
    • That was added before I started editing the article. If there is no indirect mention you can find, I'll remove the source. OtterSurf (talk) 08:45, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
      • Even if it was there before you started editing the article, you should have checked all the sources if you are going to nominate an article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:27, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • Isn't there anything more to add to the article from The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia? As far as I can see, there are at least two entries that mention Breise. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:27, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
    • Nope. The CUSWE says even less than what's here already. OtterSurf (talk) 08:30, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
QGJ
  • The section "A dark discovery" is full of compound sentences connected by —. Can you vary your sentence structure a bit here?
  • According to his description in the articles, he also belongs in Category:Engineers
  • P&T Most individuals are continuously referred to by full names. This is unneccessary, since you've already introduced them. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:17, July 15, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Rilo Tang

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 17:57, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Let's do this!

(0 ACs/1 Users/1 Total)

Support

  1. Fan26 (Talk) 16:38, July 9, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Imp
  • "Human" should be consistently de-capitalized in Canon articles.
  • Any mention in the audiobook? Imperators II(Talk) 18:07, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
    • Yep. I'll add it to Appearances. OtterSurf (talk) 18:42, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • The date ref doesn't support what it's used to source. The ref note doesn't even mention 5 ABY. Please revise. Imperators II(Talk) 14:44, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
Fan
  • In the first sentence of the bio you need to switch the positioning of human and male. Fan26 (Talk) 18:42, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think in the first sentence of the Personality and Traits section you should specify it as being according to Sijnir, as that's Rath Velus' personal opinion. Fan26 (Talk) 18:42, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • You need to link to "Private" in the Bio. Fan26 (Talk) 18:52, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think you should mention in the bio that Rath Velus later told the story of Tang during his time on Akiva. Fan26 (Talk) 19:17, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
    • Added. OtterSurf (talk) 19:33, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
      • The events of the first Aftermath can be dated to 4 ABY like this. Fan26 (Talk) 20:12, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
      • I'd like to see the specific context, not just that he told Norra the story. Fan26 (Talk) 20:12, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
        • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 20:26, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
          • What was the specific situation? Why was he telling the story to her? Fan26 (Talk) 20:30, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
            • Norra and he are talking about his role as an interrogator; it springs from a discussion about betraying the Empire. I've clarified it as best I can. OtterSurf (talk) 20:49, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
              • That works. Thank you. Fan26 (Talk) 23:43, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
  • There's actually an article for Ring as well. Fan26 (Talk) 23:46, July 1, 2019 (UTC)
Spooky
  • Akiva needs context.
  • For the 4 ABY date in the bio's last paragraph - we don't know how many months other than "several" that Aftermath takes place in. Thus, I don't think it should directly say "In 4 ABY" but should rather be something like "months after the Battle of Endor in 4 ABY" or "some point between 4 ABY and 5 ABY". spookywillowwtalk
Anil
  • You should avoid breaking up compound subjects into multiple links (i.e. just link as [[Battle of Endor]] instead of [[Battle of Endor|battle]] of [[Endor]]). Please take a look at the rest of the article, and change similar links accordingly.
  • Isn't the information about Tang from the novel enough to create a proper Skills and abilities section? TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:43, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • I'd suggest lowercasing "rebel," which is how Canon has standardized that term, as opposed to Legends, which always capitalized it. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 21:41, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • (Reviewing note) Please be careful when formatting a quote. I've fixed them for you, but keep this in mind in the future. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 22:15, July 3, 2019 (UTC)
  • The article is full of clauses like "it was rumored." You should specify by whom it was rumored, or Rilo Tang was blah-blah according to whom. Please revise. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:21, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
    • Done. OtterSurf (talk) 08:36, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
      • There are still multiple such clauses in the article. "Tang apparently ended up working trash compactors," "it was rumored that his parents sent him to the Imperial academies," etc. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 14:51, July 4, 2019 (UTC)
  • Given the context of the book, and other canon materials that use the term, I'd say gunnery officer probably needs its own article. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:02, July 14, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

XS stock light freighter (Redux review)

  • Redux comments: Reduxed per Meeting 117.
  • Date added: July 1, 2019

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Support

Object

Toprawa
  • A couple preliminaries. I think you can just remove the bit about the Galactic Defense shutdown date in the BTS and referencing. That doesn't really have anything to do with this article subject.
  • You should just remove the "Pictured only" template from Bounty Hunt in the Appearances. The ship "appears" in the story's illustrations the same as it would in a comic, for example. That template is really only necessary in Sources, with the exception of some really rare cases. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:07, July 8, 2019 (UTC)
Anil
  • "XS freighters were smaller than[3] YT-1300 light freighters,[3][4]" Is the use of double references really necessary here?
  • Where does the name "XS freighter" come from? It should be noted in Appearances or Sources, as well as BTS.
  • Plase rearrange the placement of the BTS image. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 02:58, July 14, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Syboona (species)

  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 18:46, July 5, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My Racer Revenge improvement drive continues!

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Support

  1. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 14:12, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

Object

Anil
  • You should use underscores instead of spaces for file names. i.e. [[File:Knire_Dark_CA2.png]]
    • I have no idea what happened there. The files had underscores when I copied and pasted them. Anyway, fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 08:18, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
  • Does one of the sources established the plural of Syboona is also Syboona?
    • I've seen nothing saying "Syboonas" or "Sybooni" or suchlike, so maybe I should remove any attempt at pluralisation if we're not sure. OtterSurf (talk) 08:20, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
      • I think you should just go with "Syboonas" if there is no indication of its plural form. This should also change the name of Category:Syboona TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 16:00, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
        • Done. I'll do the category as well. OtterSurf (talk) 18:17, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
  • The syboona being sentient is only mentioned in the article body. It should also be noted in the infobox and the relevant category must be added.
  • The section for the references must always be named "Notes and references."
  • The Sources must be listed in order of publication date. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:34, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
  • If you are going to pipelink something, the word must be entirely between the double square brackets. i.e. [[Galactic Republic/Legends|Galactic Republic's]] and [[Galactic Republic]]'s
    • Thanks for clarifying that! I'd always wondered. OtterSurf (talk) 08:42, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
  • (Reviewing note) {{Eras}} must always be placed at the top of the article page. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:41, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
    • I'll keep that in mind. OtterSurf (talk) 08:42, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
  • You should just remove that hidden BTS note if you can't source it.
  • The StarWars.com article for Podracer Drivers doesn't have a proper archival link. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 16:00, July 6, 2019 (UTC)
  • "HoloNet News Vol. 531 49 provides a Great ReSynchronization date of 13:3:28. This date corresponds to the year 22 BBY on the Galactic Standard Calendar, according to the following explanation." I don't like having the explanation for that date on another page. I think the reference note on this article must explain how the date is derived. Please revise. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:58, July 7, 2019 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • A mention of a character is not a mention (indirect or otherwise) of a species. If that's the only reason you're including the HoloNet News article in the Appearances list, that should just be removed. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 22:15, July 10, 2019 (UTC)
    • Fair enough. Removed. OtterSurf (talk) 07:40, July 11, 2019 (UTC)
  • You have formatting errors in references 6 and 8. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:34, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
    • Could you please show me how? OtterSurf (talk) 08:38, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
    • Nevermind, fixed. OtterSurf (talk) 08:45, July 13, 2019 (UTC)
      • You've still got something wrong in reference 8. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:00, July 16, 2019 (UTC)
        • I can't see it. Could you help me out? It looks correct to me. OtterSurf (talk) 19:35, July 16, 2019 (UTC)
          • If I just told you, you won't learn from your mistake. I suggest checking your reference against the book, then you'll probably see your error. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:40, July 16, 2019 (UTC)
QG
  • Ref 6: Right now, the last part of the ref note is kind of pointless, since it does not source anything. It would work, if you use ref 6 to also source this part in the history: where she distinguished herself in the last years of the Galactic Republic QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 12:31, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
    • Done. It's now Ref 5. OtterSurf (talk) 13:02, July 12, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Battle of T'olan

  • Nominated by: NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 18:41, July 11, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: 8 years later, turns out there was more to say.

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Object

QGJ
  • References are not allowed in the intro.
    • TFW out of practice, haha. Fixed. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:30, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • The fact that Obi-Wan was aware of the battle should be mentioned somewhere.
  • Refs 2 and 7 need to be fully linked.
  • Early in the war, perhaps within the first year or 21 BBY, This is speculative wording and should be reworded.
    • Removed the date reference there because of the revision to only c. 22 BBY. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 18:03, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • Ref 2: Relatively brief timespan relative to what? I would argue that three years of war is quite a lot of time. because of the war's relatively brief timespan
  • Honestly, following on the two above objections, I would just change the timeline placement of this battle to "around 22 BBY"
  • Can any timeframe be provided for when she left? A woman left her homeworld of Bellassa to join the Republic Military
    • No. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:30, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
      • You can still say that she left "shortly after the beginning of the war" or something along those lines. This would make the sentence and the entire section flow much more smoothly. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:40, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
  • If the books state outright that she served in the Grand Army of the Republic, then this needs to be mentioned in the article accordingly.
    • I disagree here. Given other sources treatment of the Grand Army as exclusively clone troopers, it was a mistake and the BTS note should be sufficient. I was obviously being conservative by linking out only to the Essential Guide to Warfare, but I could probably go out and find others. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:30, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
      • As I feel that we both have some valid points, I would like more input from other users, preferrably AC members, on this issue, before I strike this. I will ask around on IRC, and you are welcome to do the same if you'd like. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:40, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
        • I think Naru's right here. However, I'd like to see the BTS specify (properly sourced, of course) that clone troopers were exclusively male. Imperators II(Talk) 14:27, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
          • Found a note in EGTW that they were exclusively male. Useful book, that. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 20:36, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
            • There is a source that contradicts the fact that all clone troopers were clones of Jango, so this statement is not correct. X1 and X2 served in the GAR, but they were clones of Falon Grey, not Jango. Further, the troopers were all identical clones of the bounty hunter Jango Fett, QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:34, July 16, 2019 (UTC)
              • Incorporated that. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 01:06, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
  • Related to the above objection. The explanation regarding the GAR in the Bts should cut down on speculation. Only the first two sentences are based on verifiable info, the rest is just speculation and should be cut. In The Desperate Mission, Trever Flume said that his mother fought in the Grand Army of the Republic. The Essential Guide to Warfare stated that only clone troopers served in the Grand Army. This did not mean that there were no non-clone forces fighting for the Republic, however. It's possible she was parts of different branches of the Republic Military, such as the Planetary Security Forces or the Judicials.
    • I removed the glaring double-negative, but I want to push back here on similar grounds to the above mention of the Grand Army. It was a mistake. It is not speculative to say that the Republic had separate non-clone forces, and it is not speculative to provide the reader with examples of such forces while talking about this unusual distinction. I have removed the "It's possible she was..." because I agree that toed the line, but I think the general examples of non-clone forces should stay. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 18:03, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • When did this occur? Can this be dated to 19 BBY as well and based on what evidence? On Bellassa, an Imperial bombing killed Trever Flume's father and brother
    • It can't, definitively. Putting it in proximity to 19 BBY should be sufficient because The Desperate Mission takes place in 18 BBY and that bombing was months earlier. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:30, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
      • Actually, I thought of a better way to slip 18 BBY in there. How's that? NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:47, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • If the lead quote is the only mention of T'olan in the book, then there is not enough info to identify it as a planet. Are there other mentions that can be used as a basis for this identification? If not, then T'olan should be treated as a general nondescript location.
    • The Wuun system is called the T'olan system in The Essential Atlas Online Companion's list of systems (and, allegedly, the book proper though I couldn't find it). IIRC that has been interpreted in the past as there being a planet with that name at that place, right? Would that be sufficient? NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 18:58, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
      • Not necessarily. Systems are not always named after planets, sometimes they are named after other celestial bodies or even artificial constructions. See Ardis system or Desolation Station system, for example. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:40, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
        • OK, generalized it to a "place." NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 15:04, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
  • These two sentences need to be combined/reworded. They are way too simplistic. The battle was bloody. Trever Flume's mother died there.
    • Fixed by slipping the Obi-Wan Kenobi mention in there. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 18:03, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • Aftermath: Just calling Ferus Olin by name here would be better. he became deeply nervous when someone he cared about promised to return from danger without allowing him to come
    • The passage where he describes his feelings is more general than Ferus. I meant "someone" in the general sense. Perhaps "anyone" would be better? For reference, this is the passage: Ferus's expression clearly said not this again. But Trever didn't care. He wasn't going to be left behind. He'd been left behind before. By his mother, by his father, by his brother. Each time, they'd said It's too dangerous. You'll be safe here. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:47, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
      • Still, I think a bit of context for Ferus and his relevancy here would be nice. Perhaps reword the quote caption to: "Trever Flume attempts to persuade Jedi Ferus Olin to take him on a mission." QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 08:40, July 15, 2019 (UTC)
        • I'm down with that. I added a bit about the Jedi Temple during the Purge to convey why it was dangerous. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 15:24, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
  • Bts: Everything should be sourced.
    • Everything in there has the source in the sentence. Honest question: is leaving such things without redundant references not allowed anymore? NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:47, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
  • Bts: Release dates are needed for all the books mentioned here.
  • I don't see how the passage in "Ghosts of the Sith" can be interpreted as an indirect mention of this individual. If we know that she died early in the Clone Wars, there's no way that "Imperials" could have killed her, since the Empire did not exist at the time yet. QuiGonJinn Senate seal(Talk) 11:56, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
    • I (mostly) agree and included it out of an abundance of caution. Removed. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 17:30, July 12, 2019 (UTC)
Anil
  • If T'olan is located in the Mid Rim, Category:Battles in the Mid Rim should be added to the article.
    • Added. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 04:33, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
      • I think I'd like to see the Mid Rim bit mentioned in the article too, rather than having it mentioned only in the categories. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 15:46, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
        • Sure. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 18:13, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
          • I don't think T'olan being a planet can be sourced to the Atlas Online Companion. Please revise. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:29, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
            • OK, generalized it to a "place." NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 15:04, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
  • Per the Layout Guide, when listing multiple items in a single infobox field, including cascading items, you should use bullets to offset each item, including the first item listed.
  • "The New Essential Chronology states that the Clone Wars lasted from 22 BBY to 19 BBY. The Battle of T'olan was placed as 'early in the wars' by The Last of the Jedi: The Desperate Mission, which has been interpreted in this article as sometime within the first year." I think this is a pure speculation here. The battle may have taken place in 21 BBY, and still early in the war.
    • I initially had it as "sometime within 22 or 21 BBY," but changed it to 22 BBY due to QuiGonJinn's objection. The important thing is that its timeframe is connected to the start of the war, so c. 22 BBY should be fine. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 04:28, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
  • You don't need to link Trever Flume's mother twice in the infobox.
  • "The death of Trever Flume's mother in the battle was referenced at various points in the series and in his The Complete Star Wars Encyclopedia (2008) entry." I don't think this sentence in BTS is necessary at all. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 03:26, July 14, 2019 (UTC)
  • As far as I can see, the battle of T'olan is not capitalized in The Last of the Jedi: The Desperate Mission. If you have no additional source that capitalizes it, this should be changed in the article.
  • Could you please quote the indirect mentions of the battle from the novels here? I can't seem to find the mention in some of them.
    • Underworld: "He'd been left behind before. By his mother, by his father, by his brother. Each time, they'd said It's too dangerous. You'll be safe here. Each time they said I'll be back." [Here, the fact that they were wrong and died was the point]
    • Death on Naboo: "His mother, his father, and his brother had all fought the Empire. They had all been killed." [This is incorrect, as mentioned in the BTS]
    • A Tangled Web: "His mother, father, and brother had all died here." [This is incorrect, as mentioned in the BTS]
    • Secret Weapon: "Together with Ferus, he was the closest to family that Trever had known since his own family had died, every last one of them. Mother. Father. Brother."
    • Reckoning: "He had lost his entire family, and though he had become a street thief and a con, he had also become a hero. He just didn't know it yet."
      • The mother's death was the source of the indirect mentions. To be clear, this is not intended to be an exhaustive list of mentions of the mother's death in the books. It's just the first ones that popped up right now. In preparing this article, I was more thorough with searches of "mother," "father," "brother," "family," "Trever" (to an extent), "Flumes," etc. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 20:31, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
  • I think in ref [2], the sentence should end as " sometime around the first year" instead of "within." What do you think?
  • For ref [9], I think just saying that the book establishes all clone troopers of the Grand Army of the Republic were males should be enough, instead of quoting the relevant line from the book. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 17:32, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
    • Cropped the quotation. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 20:31, July 17, 2019 (UTC)

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  • Nominated by: OtterSurf (talk) 18:19, July 17, 2019 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Been meaning to promote this little guy for a while now.

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