Changes: Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Battle of Colla IV

Revision as of 21:17, 20 October 2013

Great work on your first nomination. 501st dogma^(talk) 17:10, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
Dat Nahdar JangFett ^(Talk) 22:34, October 14, 2013 (UTC)
IFYLOFD ^{(Enter the Floydome)} 02:46, October 17, 2013 (UTC)
That has to be the best first nomination I have seen.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 04:05, October 17, 2013 (UTC)
- Agreed. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:14, October 17, 2013 (UTC)

"...he recommended not letting the Colicoids bring them off planet, bringing to mind that a single one had taken out three platoons." Try to cut one of the brings out here.
- I replaced the first "bring" with "take" (link).
Otherwise, very well written. 501st dogma^(talk) 12:53, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you. Nahdar Vebb (talk) 16:28, October 13, 2013 (UTC)

Nice to see you on the GAN, Nahdar. First thing: in the infobox, please make sure to list Stec in the "commanders1" field instead of "forces1," since he's known to hold a commanding rank (sergeant). Also, please make sure to specifically pipelink to clone trooper sergeant throughout the article.
- I hope you meant what I did with the Clone trooper sergeant link. Nahdar Vebb (talk) 21:17, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
Is there one factory on Colla IV (as the intro states), or multiple ones (as in the History section)? Please check this for consistency. If there's at least one, it sounds like an article should be created for it.
- Unidentified factory (Colla IV). Nahdar Vebb (talk) 21:17, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
The History section should ideally mention that Stec was involved in the battle, instead of mentioning him in the Aftermath section after the battle's already over. CC7567 ^(talk) 19:39, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
- Added. Nahdar Vebb (talk) 21:17, October 20, 2013 (UTC)

The article might benefit from context for the droideka. Just saying it was another combat droid would work. 501st dogma^(talk) 17:10, October 13, 2013 (UTC)
ExiledJedi: Thank you for the compliment. Nahdar Vebb (talk) 20:01, October 17, 2013 (UTC)
Same goes for 501st dogma. :) Nahdar Vebb (talk) 20:16, October 17, 2013 (UTC)

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 =====Attack of the Clone=====
 *Nice to see you on the GAN, Nahdar. First thing: in the infobox, please make sure to list Stec in the "commanders1" field instead of "forces1," since he's known to hold a commanding rank (sergeant). Also, please make sure to specifically pipelink to [[clone trooper sergeant]] throughout the article.
+**I hope you meant what I did with the Clone trooper sergeant link. [[User:Nahdar Vebb|Nahdar Vebb]] ([[User talk:Nahdar Vebb|talk]]) 21:17, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
 *Is there one factory on Colla IV (as the intro states), or multiple ones (as in the History section)? Please check this for consistency. If there's at least one, it sounds like an article should be created for it.
+**[[Unidentified factory (Colla IV)]]. [[User:Nahdar Vebb|Nahdar Vebb]] ([[User talk:Nahdar Vebb|talk]]) 21:17, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
 *The History section should ideally mention that Stec was involved in the battle, instead of mentioning him in the Aftermath section after the battle's already over. [[W:c:starwars:User:CC7567|<b><span style="color: #00688B;">CC7567</span></b>]] <sup>[[W:c:starwars:User talk:CC7567|<span style="color: #000000;">(talk)</span>]]</sup> 19:39, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
+**Added. [[User:Nahdar Vebb|Nahdar Vebb]] ([[User talk:Nahdar Vebb|talk]]) 21:17, October 20, 2013 (UTC)
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