From the Council Chambers:Only one thing: this guy has a CSWE entry, so that needs to be mentioned in the BTS. (There's no new info from CSWE, though.) Otherwise, well done! —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 03:48, 18 June 2009 (UTC)
"putting Matarcher in the era of Supreme Chancellor Palpatine's tenth year in office." If you give an exact date, it's not really an era. If you want to use era, you might say the era of the Clone Wars, or of Palpatine's term in office, but not really an exact year. (In this case, I might just give the exact year of his arrival, and skip the era, but it's up to you).
"believing he had gotten a great deal for the starship." "Great deal" is somewhat colloquial, and a little vague. Do you mean he had gotten it for a good price?
The HoloNet news article never really says what a "Great Deal" means. I thought it was a good price, but then I though maybe he meant he thought the ship was in great condition.
You may want to mention in the bio that he was happy the incident occured, and why.
I already stated that in the P&T section, so I don't want to restating the same thing twice.
That's fine; my only concern now is that in the P&t you say he "appeared" to be happy, while in the intro you say he was "actually" happy. Which is correct?
This brought Matarcher brief fame, giving him a small HoloNet News interview - I question the use of the word "small", here as it makes it seem as if the interview was small in size, when presumably this is meant to mean that it was short in length. Alternately, "small" could mean that it was a fairly minor interview, so you should replace it with a different word, to clarify things. This applies both to the intro and the bio
Otherwise, pretty good --Jinzler 00:03, 20 June 2009 (UTC)
Addressed, thankyou for the review dude. Kilson Likes PIE 04:02, 20 June 09 (UTC)
Can you please check "outsystem"? It's rather strange for an unintentional error, and I want to check with you if it's a typo or not because it's not a word.CC7567(talk) 07:16, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
Resolved with Grunny via IRC. CC7567(talk) 07:24, 21 June 2009 (UTC)