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Cappandar[]
- Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:31, March 23, 2020 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)[]
Support[]
- RIP Cappandar --TK-462 (talk) 19:53, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
- 1358 (Talk) 19:24, April 13, 2020 (UTC)
- Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:35, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
- Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 23:46, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
- —spookywillowwtalk 23:48, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
- Zed42 (talk) 23:53, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
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UberSoldat[]
"Redhurne system" is infobox-exclusive."When Fektrin described Cappandar's death to Namir shortly after, the First Sergeant said he was one more to drink to after the raid."The second part of this sentence looks a little confusing to me.- Both addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:39, March 25, 2020 (UTC)
"Cappandar also received a short eulogy from another member." Does the novel specify who this "other member" is?UberSoldat93 (talk) 06:41, March 25, 2020 (UTC)- The novel says that each of the fallen got a one line eulogy, it does not mention Cappandar's eulogy specifically or who did it but it does mention Cappandar among the people who were being remembered and also being discussed after. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:39, March 25, 2020 (UTC)
- I've edited the sentence so that it's specific to the unit and avoids confusion in the future. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:46, March 25, 2020 (UTC)
- The novel says that each of the fallen got a one line eulogy, it does not mention Cappandar's eulogy specifically or who did it but it does mention Cappandar among the people who were being remembered and also being discussed after. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:39, March 25, 2020 (UTC)
TK-462[]
Is there any more information available for the P/T section? I'll do some digging of my own, but it seems like that part could use some minor expansion. His actual physicality might be something to add in, as the number of shots required to take him down was definitely notable.--TK-462 (talk)- Cappandar is only mentioned a few times and each time there's nothing that describes his personality. There's only the info about his lungs which I've mentioned. Also the number of shot taken to drop him might be just luck or to do with what he wears. It's too ambiguous to delve into in the article. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 20:01, April 8, 2020 (UTC)
Could the battle in the Redhurne system be expanded upon? The bio is a bit abrupt to when he is killed, you could potentially add some more content detailing how they ended up in the system, why they needed the supplies, and how the unit infiltrated the ship. Further, you could talk about Fektrin's squad and what their specific mission was on board the imperial ship.--TK-462 (talk)- Added details about the battle, going into more context about why they needed to repair their hyperdrive and when the Redhurn System is like would be a bit excessive and wouldn't add to the narriative about Cappandar. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 20:01, April 8, 2020 (UTC)
Ecks Dee[]
The second sentence of the intro reads really weird. I think you need to include the fact that it was Cappandar who was approved for this mission, like you do in the body.Technically, the fact that the eulogy was just one line is intro-exclusive. "Short" does not imply "one line".1358 (Talk) 12:13, April 12, 2020 (UTC)- Both addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 13:32, April 12, 2020 (UTC)
Zed[]
Is this specific heavy freighter notable enough for its own article?Zed42 (talk) 21:23, April 13, 2020 (UTC)- May as well. Added. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 09:53, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
Toprawa[]
If the book actually has a character speaking this one-line eulogy and not just mentioning it, an article should be created for that individual: "...with a one-line eulogy from another member of the company."Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:57, April 14, 2020 (UTC)- The book doesn't show Cappandar's eulogy, it summarizes the funeral for the 8 fallen soldiers as a whole, saying that—per tradition—each dead soldier received a one line eulogy from a friend or just another soldier failing that. I hope that makes sense. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 20:07, April 14, 2020 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:07, April 15, 2020 (UTC)