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**Provided. - - -[[File:CIS roundel.svg|16px]] [[User:OOM 224|<span style="color: #654321;font-family:franklin gothic;">'''OOM 224'''</span>]] '''[[User talk:OOM 224|<span style="color: #377014;font-family:franklin gothic;">༼༽<sup>{talk}</sup>༼༽</span>]]''' 20:53, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
 
**Provided. - - -[[File:CIS roundel.svg|16px]] [[User:OOM 224|<span style="color: #654321;font-family:franklin gothic;">'''OOM 224'''</span>]] '''[[User talk:OOM 224|<span style="color: #377014;font-family:franklin gothic;">༼༽<sup>{talk}</sup>༼༽</span>]]''' 20:53, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
 
***Still missing from the intro. Only the warring parties needs to be listed for context, there is too much of it in the body right now. [[User:Shayanomer|<span style="color:#DEB40D">'''Shayanomer'''</span>]] [[File:Din Djarin's clan.svg|15px]] ([[User talk:Shayanomer|<span style="color:#A06800">'''talk'''</span>]]) 12:31, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
 
***Still missing from the intro. Only the warring parties needs to be listed for context, there is too much of it in the body right now. [[User:Shayanomer|<span style="color:#DEB40D">'''Shayanomer'''</span>]] [[File:Din Djarin's clan.svg|15px]] ([[User talk:Shayanomer|<span style="color:#A06800">'''talk'''</span>]]) 12:31, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
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****Fixed both intro and body. - - -[[File:CIS roundel.svg|16px]] [[User:OOM 224|<span style="color: #654321;font-family:franklin gothic;">'''OOM 224'''</span>]] '''[[User talk:OOM 224|<span style="color: #377014;font-family:franklin gothic;">༼༽<sup>{talk}</sup>༼༽</span>]]''' 19:10, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
 
*<s>"''Thus, the adept proved herself a capable assassin, one, Dooku remarked, Henchman would have applauded.''" Some formal wording here would be nice.</s>
 
*<s>"''Thus, the adept proved herself a capable assassin, one, Dooku remarked, Henchman would have applauded.''" Some formal wording here would be nice.</s>
 
**Reworded the latter half of the intro. - - -[[File:CIS roundel.svg|16px]] [[User:OOM 224|<span style="color: #654321;font-family:franklin gothic;">'''OOM 224'''</span>]] '''[[User talk:OOM 224|<span style="color: #377014;font-family:franklin gothic;">༼༽<sup>{talk}</sup>༼༽</span>]]''' 20:53, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
 
**Reworded the latter half of the intro. - - -[[File:CIS roundel.svg|16px]] [[User:OOM 224|<span style="color: #654321;font-family:franklin gothic;">'''OOM 224'''</span>]] '''[[User talk:OOM 224|<span style="color: #377014;font-family:franklin gothic;">༼༽<sup>{talk}</sup>༼༽</span>]]''' 20:53, May 23, 2020 (UTC)

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Henchman

  • Nominated by: CIS roundel OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 23:23, May 19, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: First status article. Was going for CA, but I've exceeded the word count.

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  • That image belong somewhere else in the body, not in the BtS, as it relates to in-universe information, not OOU information.
  • A 'Sources' section, with the Starwars.com cast list page included and marked with {{1stID}}, should be added. Fan26 (Talk) 01:08, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
Shayanomer
  • Episode air date required, with the appropriate source.
  • "22 BBY–21 BBY" is unnecessary, it should be replaced with something like "at some point between 22 and 21 BBY" per precedent. Shayanomer Din Djarin&#039;s clan (talk) 07:16, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • You should expand the intro a bit. Currently it's pretty short.
    • How about now? I've also expanded the body to include Ventress proving herself a warrior and becoming Dooku's acolyte since it's related to Henchman's preparations (of the arena) and assassination. - - -CIS roundel OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 05:58, May 21, 2020 (UTC)
  • "...wherein gladiators demonstrated their prowess before the Sith Lord in search of an acolyte." This makes it seem like the gladiators were looking for an acolyte.
  • Dooku's line on Henchman's death can be added as a quote in the Biography. Shayanomer Din Djarin&#039;s clan (talk) 20:39, May 20, 2020 (UTC)
  • Context for Clone Wars in intro and body.
    • Provided. - - -CIS roundel OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 20:53, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
      • Still missing from the intro. Only the warring parties needs to be listed for context, there is too much of it in the body right now. Shayanomer Din Djarin&#039;s clan (talk) 12:31, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
  • "Thus, the adept proved herself a capable assassin, one, Dooku remarked, Henchman would have applauded." Some formal wording here would be nice.
  • In the BTS, you should start with the character's appearance; it currently starts with the voice actor and episode air date. Shayanomer Din Djarin&#039;s clan (talk) 20:15, May 23, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

  • Won't make an objection out of this, but audio files would be useful for readers who wish to know what the character sounds like. Shayanomer Din Djarin&#039;s clan (talk) 20:16, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
    • Noted. Unfortunately, I can't add them since I don't have the DVDs. - - -CIS roundel OOM 224 ༼༽{talk}༼༽ 20:53, May 23, 2020 (UTC)
      • Try to find someone who has access to the show. Shayanomer Din Djarin&#039;s clan (talk) 12:31, May 24, 2020 (UTC)
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