"The facility, which was located the industrial district of the Galactic Republic's capital planet of Coruscant." This sentence isn't finished, it needs to either be carried into the next sentence, or changed around.
My apologies, that was a bad copyedit on my part. I corrected that myself. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 14:15, August 9, 2011 (UTC)
In the BTS you say that he appeared in the guide first, then the game. But, in the appearances, you say that he appeared in the game first. Which is it?
Can anything be said in the P&T of his rigging of the sabbac match, or of the fact that he worked in the death sticks business?
Well, I don't really think that it can be said for sure that he knew he was in the death stick business. This is due to the fact that there was a another Guineo working at Haugg Nerf that did not know that he was guarding death sticks. I mentioned Gumb's cheating at sabacc in the P&T, but I'm not sure if I worded it right. Any suggestions?--Exiled Jedi(Greetings) 22:18, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
I was rather surprised (and a little disappointed) with the number of careless errors that I found in the article, especially given the fact that it's already received two reviews. I would encourage more thoroughness for all involved. CC7567(talk) 21:09, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
Yikes, I guess I should pay better attention, sorry about that, I'll try to do better in the future.--Exiled Jedi(Greetings) 22:18, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
I think the last sentence of the bio's main paragraph ("During the same year... death stick demand.") could be reworded to improve the flow a bit. Specifically, I believe it would be better if you tried to mention the Bando Gora only once, preferably at the end of the sentence.
This sentence in the P&t section is choppy: He stood over two meters in height, and he had some knowledge on how to use a blaster. consider revising. Otherwise another great article EJ!--Talrrivanian (Headquarters) 07:47, August 17, 2011 (UTC)