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Star Wars Episode VII: Shadows of the Sith[]
- Nominated by: Dentface (talk) 22:00, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments:
- WookieeProject (optional): WP:VG, WP:LE
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Support[]
- NanoLuukeCloning facility 00:25, 6 November 2021 (UTC)
- Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:58, 28 January 2022 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:58, 14 February 2022 (UTC)
- LucaRoR (Talk) 15:45, 14 February 2022 (UTC)
- MasterFred(talk) 07:06, 20 February 2022 (UTC)
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NanoLuuke[]
It's not a strong objection, but I'm a bit conflicted by the use of "wind down" here: "as development on The Force Unleashed began to wind down". Personally, (and keep in mind I'm French), I was only aware of the meaning "relax", "slow down", but I also discovered it could mean exactly what you intended: "to draw gradually toward an end" (per Merriam-Webster). At any rate, I find it confusing, too colloquial and not explicit enough. Maybe changing it for "as The Force Unleashed reached the end of its development cycle", or something similar?--NanoLuukeCloning facility 00:40, 5 November 2021 (UTC)In the Bibliography, the entry could be updated with {{C|Logo only}} (as supported by policy). I have a copy of Rogue Leaders: The Story of LucasArts and it looks like there's nothing else.--NanoLuukeCloning facility 00:40, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
CC-8[]
For that ellipsis in the main quote, you should use … rather than three full stops.- I think a line in the body about the logo being revealed in Rogue Leaders would be appropriate.
- Blackman's full name shouldn't be used in the last development paragraph
- Might be worth specifying that Darth Caedus was a Sith, just so that there's a spot where the Sith get mentioned outside of the appearances section
A sentence in the continuity section about the Ep VII title would also be relevant, as in how it connects to the main saga films and when it was used by TFACommander Code-8 Hello There! 11:23, 23 January 2022 (UTC)
UberSoldat[]
If Rogue Leaders uses the full logo with the text, wouldn't that count as a full mention of the subject?UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:25, 4 February 2022 (UTC)- In my opinion, Logo only is still the most accurate. Nowhere in the next is the title actually mentioned. It's just a logo on a page spread with no mention of anything or any extended context. Having the parenthetical be "mentioned only" might be misleading to the reader, making them think the original source has more information. Dentface (talk) 07:50, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
- We don't use Mo for Sources anyway. We have other examples where the text in images count as mentions of the subject, like Ronto Wrap in the Star Wars Encyclopedia. UberSoldat93 (talk) 05:30, 14 February 2022 (UTC)
- In my opinion, Logo only is still the most accurate. Nowhere in the next is the title actually mentioned. It's just a logo on a page spread with no mention of anything or any extended context. Having the parenthetical be "mentioned only" might be misleading to the reader, making them think the original source has more information. Dentface (talk) 07:50, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
I'd like to see context for Blackman, currently the article does not make it clear what his role was.UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:32, 4 February 2022 (UTC)- No formal title for Blackman's role on the project was revealed, and this is just speculation, which is why it isn't explicit in the article, I'd wager that the project was so early on that there weren't any official titles. Nonetheless, I mentioned that Blackman was Creative Director of LucasArts. Dentface (talk) 07:50, 13 February 2022 (UTC)
Fred strikes back[]
"Never see the light of day" seems a bit too editorial. Could we reword to sound more encyclopedic?MasterFred(talk) 10:27, 14 February 2022 (UTC)
Comments[]
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:06, 20 February 2022 (UTC)